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47 people have played this

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Click to hear Leazona's recording

Everything's new - my mic, me trying out audacity. Living on a small island where I don't know of anyone who would be able to listen critically to this. Would really appreciate your feedback. Thank you so very much!

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Cool. Nice audition reel

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Nice and clean recording, good clear voice with nice pitch lift and inflections! Loved it!

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Sounds like you put a lot of hard work and determination in this reel. You were energetic, clear, and so full of life. Hope this reel gets you plenty of work. Break a leg.

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Thank you all very much. I'm working on putting together demos for different genres and then decide on a coach. Appreciate the feedback.

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Very well done. Great interpretation of copy and nicely voiced.

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54 people have played this

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Click to hear bpatten21's recording

Wanted to get some feedback on how my performance was and quality of the audio is in this demo.

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Peer Feedback:

Your inflection was great. I didn't understand everything that was said, but i think that may be because i couldn't keep up with all the character changes.
Are there 1 or 2, that can be cut, to slow it down?

Overall, this was very well done.

Good luck!

Peer Feedback:

Wow, really nice, is that one person's voice or are there others?

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thank you, ecstern , all the voices you hear are mine including the parrot.

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60 people have played this

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Click to hear KyleWrightMusic's recording

Singing demo, thoughts?

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Peer Feedback:

That was awesome! You have a very strong voice and the choices fit you very well. The quality of your recording was very clear and your performance had great clarity, pacing and emotion. I hope a singing demo can be used. I'd definitely give you an audition! Nice job!

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48 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear Suzeeek's recording

DRAFT DRAFT DRAFT super rough draft of a narration demo I want to work on with my coach next week. Please ignore all chair creaks, breaths and extraneous noises. I'm not really looking for technical feedback at this time. This is just for practice. What I would like to know is this: 1) Do I sound emotionally invested? 2) Do I sound "like I care?" (I'm working on being more expressive!) I've recorded 5 segments, and while the recording is much too long for a 2 minute demo, I'd like to hear what you think about each one: Firefighting camp Pizza Painting Gardening Dreamhome. Thank you in advance!

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Peer Feedback:

the read was fine. you need something to absorb the sound in your studio. it was thin and sound bounced around.

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You read fine, but to me it sounds to me as if you are reading when I feel you should be speaking to me, a friend or a relative. Who is your audience? When you ask a question, "looking to improve the appearance of your home without spending an arm and a leg? - I am not feeling that you are asking me the question, so it sounds like you are reading to me and that is a bit impersonal. To make it believable for me, you have to 'sound' like you are asking me the questions. Hope this helps.

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69 people have played this

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Click to hear DavidGrant's recording

Thanks for any feedback.

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Peer Feedback:

Very good quality, I've lived the script with your infections .. best of luck ..

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Thanks mshehata. I think your recordings are very good, and I like the way you incorporate music into them.

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47 people have played this

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Click to hear jodithors's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Nicely, done!

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I really liked your demo, the music, scripts and your performance. I listened with headphones on and thought that music levels were just a tiny bit above your voice at some points. Impressive overall.

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46 people have played this

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Click to hear Dzpilot1's recording

Hello, This is my first demo I've ever put together, and I would love some constructive criticism on it. It's a commercial demo with 4 spots. I'm trying to get a sense if I'm heading in the right direction or do I need to go back to the drawing board. Thank you in advance for taking the time to listen and provide feedback.

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Peer Feedback:

I don't think you need to go back to the drawing board. You have a great voice and the spots chosen fit your style. I can hear though, that with the proper tweeting, theses spots would become excellent. Because there are four of them, the individualness of each would have to be addressed. Quick critique: 1st demo--more personal; who are you talking to? 2nd demo--more energy, convince your buddy in the locker room he REALLY needs this. 3rd demo--more smile, over the top approach. 4th demo--again, who are you talking to? It's got to be more than just reading words on a page. Have somebody in mind, make them your inspiration and target. All this coming from someone in your shoes and wanting to be good at the craft. I'm not a coach, but these are the things I come away with. Hope it helps.

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Click to hear uksoundz's recording

Hi, this is simply a test of my new recording space. I have recently moved house and have had to re-create my vocal area! Probably not particularly good but I would like a little feedback on how the room sounds, this is recorded with no gate, compression, normalisation or anything at all. Any feedback much appreciated. Thanks Paul

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uksoundz
Great sound no floor noise

Peer Feedback:

Sounds clear! If you have a closet or maybe some more sound dampening around you say for instance..pillows ,blankets always helps!
Here is a quick tip for you. buy a plastic container ,get some padding like bed padding and glue to container .Add your mike and see if that helps cheers!

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103 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear TaniaBu's recording

This is my Commercial Demo, looking for any feedback. Thanks!

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I loved the versatility of your commercials. You handled them well! You have great pacing, clarity, and inflection. I felt the emotion during the thoughtful pieces. I hope this demo brings you work. Nice job! Music behind the recording wasn't overpowering. A challenge!

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Good Job!

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Sounds amazing. I love the versatility. I might have ran a touch of de-esser on the under armor one, but it might just be my headphones.

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Overall a nice variety of tone and delivery style. However, whoever did the production has overblown the volume and it's clipping about 17 times throughout. It's produced right up to 0db. Never do that. -3db is pretty much the standard. Keep in mind that for eveyr 3db in difference up or down, that's either half or twice the volume. So being at 0db, it's pretty much twice as loud as it ought to be. Imagine someone pulling that up and having to hit their volume control. That's something they'll take note of in evaluating what they've got in front of them "hmmm....they might not know how to actually produce their work"

The length of the file is just right. None of the clips take too long, so as far as that goes, well done. But gotta get the production right too. Good luck.

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I believe the overall demo is ok the senior home might be a litlle extended. The volume could be be made better by normalizing the file to - 3db. I found no clips.Nice job.

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Very nice variety and range in emotions. Your voice and the music/effects were well balanced. Great demo!

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Very Good!! Fantastic!! Great Sound.everything!!

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54 people have played this

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Click to hear bpatten21's recording

My concerns is the quality and the performances.

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Peer Feedback:

1) Copy Interpretation - I like the sound effects - sounds like Transformers, nice and bassy, chaotic - is this for Sci-Fi/Animation/Space? If so, that seems appropriate, idk - I don't think the old grandpa sound seemed to fit with the rest, but I thought that was your one of your best spots, I think you put that in for contrast, but maybe you can contrast the Sci Fi with more slower Sci-Fi idk Maybe contrast two first ones with the grandpa one so there is a dramatic contrast - fast with slow and alternate genres - too much of the same in the very beginning.

2) Vocal Performance - Sounds determined and fat for the anarchy, chaos, and a bit goofy for the censor spot sounds good. You have a good variety to your characters good for you!

3) Recording - I think you might want a check you post you had more than 30 seconds of dead sound at the end.

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66 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear bpatten21's recording

I wanted to do my own dialogue for this read. Let me know what you think.

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Peer Feedback:

I will focus on the recording: I listened to your voiceover with high quality headphones and speakers from a video game monitor. I thought the recording was balanced in terms of the volume of your voice and music. I listened hard for any recording issues and I just didn't hear any.

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I think your performance really fits the genre well -- you know what you're doing. That said, I think your voice sounds a bit too processed, and I'd like for it to be more dominant than it is in this mix. Overall, it's very good -- I'm looking forward to hearing more from you!

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59 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear jbuzby@udel.edu's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Nice job! It would take me a few times to not stumble over any words at that pace. The pace is fast but works (obviously a 30 sec spot)
I have two criticisms: 1) The music is a smidgen too loud. Its as if you are competing with the music.
2) I can tell you are enunciating well, but its getting lost. I don't know if your bass is too high, or maybe too close to the mic. but I was having some trouble understand all the words

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I also had trouble hearing all the words. It seemed like there was too much bass. It sounded muffled, especially at the beginning.

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82 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear barjengo34's recording

This is my first animation demo, recorded with Edge Studio. I would welcome any comments and criticism. Thanks!!

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I think the dialogue is funny and adult, good job.

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Recording quality spectacular
Performance.... out of this world.
Most versatile and creative recording I've heard yet!

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Well, that's it, I give up!

Seriously though, really outstanding work.

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97 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear johnbobguy's recording

I know that it's not very good, but this was my first attempt at a demo. I've been told my sound quality is ok, but my acting was subpar, and I know that mixing commercial and character are big no-no's, so I do plan on re-recording it. If I could get some suggestions on how to get better, I'd really appreciate it, because I had so much fun recording it and want to do this more so badly.

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Hi, I do not claim to be an expert I am hear for critique myself. You have a good variety. I did find that on one or two of the tracks that the music overpowered the speech.

I am happy to listen.
Mark

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This should probably be about 30-40 seconds shorter. Maybe vary the characters, i.g. modify the pitch, placement, accent and/or intensity. You are very talented and you're on the right track but you just need to "sell" it a bit more.

Peer Feedback:

It sounds like you really want to do this :) Good ambition! I like your voice and I appreciate and respect anyone who braves this business. Demo should be shorter for sure. but I am not sure what to shorten. I was told 10 seconds for each commercial spot MAX. Pick your 5 BEST if you're going to go with a minute or longer. Go for subtle music - check youtube for some audacity tutorials. That being said - you had a GREAT variety of things in the demo...could be confusing to someone who is looking for just commercial or just narrative. Create 2 demos one commercial selling different things, then another demo with narrative script.

I have had to take classes on lists and delivering lists. The first spot in the demo has a really rough list that got boggy fairly quickly.

All of the reads were a bit choppy. They didn't sound like normal "talking to someone", they sounded "read"

I think the reason that you shouldn't have a character in your commercial demo is that you really want them to know you and your variety without turning to (resorting to) a character. Try subtle differences: Talk to different people for each spot. Your brother, sister, Walmart checkout guy, friend at church, boss, friend at work, female friend at work...etc etc.

I say all above with a smile of encouragement and a fist bump. Keep up the desire - nurture it with coaching - feel confidant in your ability. You'll do great!!!

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81 people have played this

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Click to hear jerry lino's recording

My demo. Any comments or critiques are welcomed and appreciated

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Hi Jerry,

Great production and sound! I like the variety you have to offer. I've always admired your work, great job!

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Click to hear smillercrews's recording

I'm working on updating my commercial demo with work I've booked to help me find a new agent when my current contract is up. I want to make sure that it is professionally competitive and gives a good sense of my voice, while still having enough variety.

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Is this your current demo? Or is this your booked work you're piecing together? Or a combo?

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I'm updating my demo with work that I've booked. Two pieces are from my previous demo, but the rest is booked work. I'd like to find a new agent when my current contract is up, and was hoping for feedback on what I've put together.

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I like the variety of tone and delivery. You have a very young sound and you use it well. You come across as knowledgeable even though young. Almost geeky in one of the spots. Pretty strong demo IMO. Nice stuff.

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Since we can't edit our submissions anymore...I wanted to add that I like the variety as well. I think you've achieved what you were trying to do.

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Thank you so much, I really appreciate your thoughts.

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79 people have played this

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Click to hear wxman2009's recording

New to this and wanted to know how everything sounds, and what I could/ should do next. This was from one of the practice scripts. I have a few others, but wanted to get some feedback.

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I loved the interpretation of the script. I could really invision you being a serial killer, and enjoying it! The quality of the recording was clean. I found your reading to be believable and liked where you were going with it. Nice job!

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145 people have played this

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Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

This is my character demo that I put together last month. This demo is NOT meant to be submitted to an agent. This is particularly for getting online work, so don't think of this as a "professional" demo reel. I will get one professionally produced when I'm ready. Feedback is always welcome.

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It sounds amazing! You def sound like different people! Good luck!

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Really great job with the variation in the voices! Fantastic!

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Very impressed. Probably one of the best self produced demos ive heard. Great presence on the vocals (nice and forward in the mix) and the production quality was really good. Some of the vocals needed another take IMO, unless that was character specific, and a couple of fx I would switch up but thats only personal preference. Really well done!

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Thanks, guys!

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84 people have played this

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Click to hear Paul Sullivan's recording

Any constructive feedback for my Commercial Demo, gratefully welcomed. Many thanks, Paul.

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Ok I love your voice, you sound so friendly and "cuddly?" (Is that weird?)

Your first script seems a bit ominous for some reason, but the rest of it is super friendly and approachable.

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Thank you Suzeeek,

No, I don't think it's weird - I'll take "friendly" and "cuddly" anytime! :)

Thanks again,

Paul.

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109 people have played this

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Click to hear mtanner's recording

This is a gaming demo reel idea that I am working on. I'm trying to do it as a self contained narrative instead of separate unrelated clips. I need feedback on the script writing, performance and production, please.

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Very cool approach! Recording quality sounds professional.

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I get all of the different accents, but everything still sounds like you. Limited dynamic range (energy, emotionally and pitch wise) and all the voices sound like a variation of the same guy - if you discount the FX processing.

I spoke to David Goldberg once about character demos and asked if it was wise to have a through narrative for a demo. His answer was, "No."

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I'm nowhere near an expert and still trying to develop my ear, but it sounds great to me. I can hear the difference in the characters, and the production quality is good, in my opinion.

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110 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear anei's recording

Any notes for these character voices? Just compiling something into a workable demo. Please comment on f/x, music, everything! Thanks.

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Anei,

I believe you did a pretty decent job with the voices and production. The production was very consistent with the tune and various sounds i.e. duck and splash. I enjoyed it and think you should definitely move forward.
Thanks for sharing

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The VO track seems disconnected from the other stuff. There's a lot of echo and ambient room noise. Doesn't sound like a studio recording as much as something slapped together. The quality of the production leaves much to be desired. Not sure that this represents you well.

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104 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear anei's recording

Would love to get some adjectives describing my voice. Thanks, everyone!

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Genuine, precise, connected, relatable, real. Hired!

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Sounds very friendly, trusting, and still knowledgeable. You have a 'mother's voice' that works well for many of these types of commercials. Great job and very professional quality.

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Nice demo. Works for me.

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Versatile, crisp, I could definitely listen to your voice for an extended length of time.
Great demo reel!

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81 people have played this

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Click to hear Claire Henry's recording

Is it clear enough to use as part of a demo? should I take the breaths out or minimize them?

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I think it sounded clear, and although I'm still learning, clear is something I strive for, and believe I can recognize.

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104 people have played this

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Click to hear ShreepsVox's recording

A commercial demo I've recorded -- new to voice acting but have spent the last 10 years singing & vocalizing. I mixed this myself too but did not add sound effects. Is it worthwhile to add effects? Any feedback would be welcome. I also recorded and mixed this demo on my own.

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Greetings!
This is the first demo I have heard without the sound effects and of course done by the actual person recording. I have to say that I thought it was pretty good. Your sound is very clear and it is very easy to understand you.
Kinda curious what it would sound like with the effects. From my understanding it is a good idea to add effects to your demo's. This was it gives the person listening the true experience, if that makes any sense.
All in all, I found it to be very well put together.

Good Luck!
Ken P.

Peer Feedback:

Not a good idea to produce your own demo. The people who you might shop this around to - agents, casting directors, and even clients - will know that it's home grown and not professionally produced. The result is that they may not get past the first 5 seconds - even if you added music and FX - before deleting it and moving on tho the next one.

Singing is a great foundation for VO. You practice breath control and breath support. But that's only part of what you need for VO. Script breakdown, interpretation, different styles and genres of commercials takes some study. It's not just about having a good voice and saying words articulately.

At this point, you don't know what you don't know. Study more, get coaching and direction before getting a demo produced. Otherwise, you're just putting the cart before the horse.

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I like your clear sound. Nice diction and your voice sounds adaptable to a number of venues.

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What James said...pretty much what I would say. Another consideration is that each clip sounds like the one before and after it. Your delivery is a little choppy and start/stop. There's no professional quality to the clips. No production other than a voice. If I were the person listening for new talent through demos...sorry, this one wouldn't pass muster. Don't do your own demo.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear rirvinmoore's recording

This is a brief line from Macbeth, Act I Scene 2, delivered through 3 different mics. In order, these are my laptop's internal mic, a Blue Snowball, and a Radio Shack headset mic.

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Peer Feedback:

The Blue Snowball is a popular mic for podcasters. Quite frankly, the Radio Shack headset mic actually sounds better to my aged ears. But they all have their problems, not to mention that your recording space is very "live".

However. if you are serious about doing VO, you should invest in a good quality large diaphragm condenser mic and a good quality interface and software. The software isn't crucial, as it only understands the 1's and 0's coming in from the interface. But each has its own bells and whistles. It just depends on what you feel comfortable using. My personal preference is REAPER.

www.reaper.fm

And you will have to sound treat/sound deaden your recording space.

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I thought the same thing about the Radio Shack mic. Sadly, the headset is starting to fall apart, but it's quite sensitive. Maybe too sensitive, since it picks up all those tiny little noises coming from my mouth that the end listener doesn't really need to hear. The Snowball is more noise-resistant, but sounds grainy and throws out some of the character of my voice. I do hope to move to a more suitable space before long and perhaps I can enhance the deadness of my recording space. I will check out Reaper as well. Thanks for the input. I'm transitioning from Shakespearean theater and hope to put my voice to good use in this new medium.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear reinainoue's recording

I prevented reverberation by recording under a quilt. How does my demo sound?

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Peer Feedback:

Hi guys! Also, yes. I am British :)

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Yes, the quilt did an excellent job at absorbing stray sound waves; I don't hear any room tone at this point.

However, I don't know if it's the accent, your closeness to the microphone, recording levels, microphone quality, or possible post-processing, but your words seem to be washed out by your voice; it's hard to make out what you are saying with any specific certainty.

When using a microphone, proximity is important (particularly if the microphone is a condenser microphone), but you need enough distance so that your voice doesn't overpower the articulators, such as the hisses of the sibilant "S" or "Z" sounds, the pulses of "P", "T", "D", and other plosive consonants, and other sounds that turn a steady voice into a series of sounds that make words.

Additionally, it never hurts to start with a lower recording level, to account for potential peaks in your voice, and just normalize the audio once you've finished recording.

That being said, try to use as little post-processing as possible; any noise handling should be done in the room itself, such as that blanket. The more you process the sound, the more likely sound artifacts will appear, making it sound less realistic, and potentially less acceptable to clients.

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I feel your read could be a little faster. Also, you could articulate a bit more (more consonants particularly at the ends of words).

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Thanks so much for the feedback! I really appreciate it ^_^

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Had a hard time understanding what you were saying

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Nice voice, unclear diction.

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Thanks for the feedback everyone. Is it my accent? Is the music to loud? How could I improve?

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear reinainoue's recording

Hi, I'm looking for detailed feedback on my American Accent! Open to all kinds of feedback.

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Peer Feedback:

Reina,

Love your enthusiasm! In all reality Edge Studio has t he professionals to guide you and teach you in forming the correct way to voice over as a career or to supplement your income, even as just a hobby. Please let them help you, and you will be on your way!

Peer Feedback:

The voice is strong, and the diction is good.

For the sake of this critique, I am assuming that by "American Accent," you are referring to the Standard Midwest dialect that is prevalent in U.S. broadcasting.

You seem to be going in the right direction, and with some practice, you should be pretty good. However, I am noticing some words and phrases that you might benefit from hearing them spoken by natives. I'm not sure how to correct them in a text-based format, so I'll just draw your attention to the words and phrases I'm noticing with some variations from the American Accent.

NOTE: Some consistent things you might want to work on is the pronunciation of the phrase "voice over", as the vowels aren't quite correct.

You might also want to put some time practicing the nasal consonants "M" and "N," as it seems like your native accent closes them off by closing the nasal cavity, cutting the sound short. The U.S. speaker will instead stop the sound at the vocal folds, ending the sound by ending the voice.

From here, I'm going to go over your recording, and point out the more significant breaks from the U.S. norm; there's enough variation from region to region that slight variations won't be so noticeable.

First, there is a sharp cut between "happy" and "to;" the American accent typically will allow the "y" sound to fade, allowing the tongue blockage of the start of "t" to break the two words apart. "...Your voice over done" seems to have some problems with the vowel sounds, and the "r" sounds are a bit heavy. Next is "record," which sounds similar to "recode"; the second "r" isn't being enunciated enough. The next "voice over," once again, needs some work with the vowels to ensure they are correct.

The next three words are pretty close to correct, so we can safely pass them to the next one: "video." The "o" sound at the end sounds a little British, or possibly Australian, where the o's diphthong shifts to a flat oo (as in "book"), or to an "i" sound. In the U.S., the final o starts the same way, but will always end with a "w" sound, with no tongue movement.

Next one to pay attention to is "radio." Once again, that trailing "o" has an almost British/Australian sound to it. Then, there's "pretty" which seems to be missing the "t" sound in the middle; it sounds like you went from "i" directly to "y," with a pause suggesting the "t" sounds.

"Between" is pretty close, but you probably need to make the "n" sound a bit more nasal; it sounds like you blocked off the nasal passage a second after starting the "n" sound. When finishing a word with "n" keep the nasal passages open, and just let the voice die down to end the sound.

There seems to be a strong break again between "specific" and "instructions," similar to the "happy"/"to" cut.

The "a" in "as" isn't quite right, you might want to listen to someone else say it to get a better idea of the sound. And, like the above "n," it sounds like you are closing off the nasal passage to end the "m" sound for the word "I'm.

The "voice over" once again seems to have some difficulty with the vowels; you might want to check on some other native speakers for that one.

Finally, the "n" and "m" are once again quickly blocked off in the nasal passages.

Peer Feedback:

Whoa thanks so much for the feedback! It is thoroughly appreciated.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear reinainoue's recording

I am trying to do an American Accent, hopefully in a Standard accent. Please tell me how I sound! I would be willing to receive any feedback.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi! This is a short bite, but I can take away that your recording sounds a bit hollow and tinny as if there is an echo. Maybe try to deaden your recording space and find something to soak up the reverberation..!? Keep up the good work!

Peer Feedback:

Needs plenty of work. At the end, the phrase "your call" sounds phonetically like "pro-cess yaw call." An American accent is more like "prah-cess yer call." An American R-sound is more like the R in "regiment" or "red." To me (an American), the R-sound that you made sounds like a W. That would be fine for a British accent and many others, but it doesn't sound American. The beginning just sounds muddy and not American at all.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear ARichwine's recording

New commercial demo I just got back - looking for objective critique from peers.....

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Peer Feedback:

Hi ARichwine,
Your coming through very clear. The only thing I will critique is that your delivery doesn't change with each script. Every script is by a different writer or writers, they have a flavor all their own. My suggestion would be to practice stretching your delivery. Those who listen to your demo might not see a good fit for their project if you don't provide a broader demonstration of your capabilities. They might not see anything that grabs them at first but subsequent samples might.

Peer Feedback:

Hi Richard, thanks so much! This was my thought & fear as well! Although I was assured by the company producing the spots that wasn't the case, I feared it was....I gave them what they asked of me......unfortunately....looks like I'll be looking to do another commercial reel!

Peer Feedback:

If you are able/open to sharing, what company produced the reel? I understand about the lack of variation, but your voice is lovely, unique and easy on the ears...

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Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

Hey guys, a bit of a different take on my website intro. Switched to a stereo recording, and added a light music track (not sure if I'll keep the music or not). Worked on getting rid of plosives, but some mouth noises on 'you're welcome to have a look around' I went for the most natural read I could muster (by explaining what I had for breakfast for about a minute before I got into the script), but it's not hugely different from my previous take. Anyways, any feedback is appreciated. K

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Peer Feedback:

Wow, great job. I personally think the music adds a nice touch, maybe have it just a tiny bit more in the background.

I can definitely tell you have been doing this for a while, you have a pleasant, easy-going yet professional sound and you seem to have mastered your vocal delivery. The piece seems very well put together.

Very nice work.

Peer Feedback:

Nice commercial for yourself. Just one suggestion. You might do a gentle fade at the end. It ends rather abruptly.

Hmmm. Belay that.

After several more listens, I think it's that the musical phrase isn't completed or doesn't resolve. It sort of ends in the middle of a bar. That extra fraction of a second might make a big difference. Plus, the music volume bumps up quite a bit after the VO. So, the fade is a bit drastic.

Peer Feedback:

It's been about 2 years really, but it's been picking up more and more. I live abroad, so there is a real demand for people right now in South East Asia, Hong Kong, and mainland China for professional V.O Talents, so I'm lucky because there are so few people doing this full time, and I live in the same timezone.

I hear the volume increase at the end, and I think I might be able to bring it down, and shorten the clip rather than wait for the next beat. I used the 'audio duck' setting very very slightly when making this track so it popped back up near the end when the V.O stops.

Thanks very much as always guys.

Peer Feedback:

What DAW?

Some of those presets are an arbitrary average. You might have to tweak that a little. I use side chain compression (basically the same thing) for ducking and I can play with the compressor's settings for a good blend.

Peer Feedback:

TASCAM US 2x2 which has some presets in it's settings panel, but actually I have them bypassed so I can avoid looping back, or any external effects won't be messed with. I had a client tell me to once and I kept it on the same settings ever since.

I think for ducking, I just don't know my levels well enough yet. I listen to them through my monitors and think "yah that's nice" but I don't know what I'm doing well enough to be confident. I'll look into side chain compression and see what I can learn. :)

Thanks James

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Click to hear Lee J's recording

The character is a Senior Male, introspective, reflective

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Peer Feedback:

I think that your pace and intonation throughout is incredible! Wow. Recording quality is also very good. Maybe more variation in your prosody on, "and investing with wide eye (sp?) funds", just since it's a switch in gears from discussing family, etc. But otherwise, very good!

Peer Feedback:

Great job Lee. Pacing very nice, Excellent voice tone and interpretation of the script. I detect a slight regional accent, but can't quite place it. This is not a big deal as the script calls for a "folksy" introspective read.

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Click to hear cxanthos's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Only got 5 seconds in and had to stop. The recording is too loud and echo-y due to your live recording environment. Sounds like you recorded this in your tiled bathroom on your laptop's built-in microphone. Fairly unlistenable, which makes it difficult to critique.

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Click to hear Naina Kader's recording

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Peer Feedback:

You're not from Nashville, are you?

Very nice. Is this a demo or part of a demo?

Peer Feedback:

Hi James, I'm not from Nashville, the company I recorded that for is :)

Thank you, It is part of a demo I have two other sections to it which cover e- learning and character voices, I will be uploading those next for feedback.

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111 people have played this

Demo Recording:

Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

Hey. It's been a while since I've posted, or given any feedback on edgestudio. This year has been quite busy, so much so that I'm in the middle of building a website for my V.O work. A single page, yet dynamic little thing, and the first thing people will see (besides my beautiful face) will be a welcome text. I thought it would be interesting to record it and see what it sounds like, and my design guy thought it would be interesting to include into the welcome. Anyways, this is just a practice read I made at home, but just wanted some feedback from anyone. As always, it's much appreciated.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi Kevin great voice, Im in the process of doing the same for my website!

I listened to your clip on my laptop at first and there was a lot of sibilance I then listened to it on my headphones and it was fine. You might want to listen to it on few different outputs just to make sure, but as you said it was only a practice read! So I am sure you probably have this covered.

Your tone amazing, In my opinion it would be nice to hear it a little more conversational as it's a personal introduction :)

Peer Feedback:

Hi,
Very nice voice tone. On the technical side there are quite a few pops (plosives) on P's and T's. Also, I think the noise gate may be working a bit too hard - particularly on the abrupt cut offs.

On the performance, it seemed kind of choppy - to Naina's point "...it would be nice to hear it a little more conversational..." Also, the word Professional sounded a bit like Perfessional.

- touzet -

Peer Feedback:

Hi guys, I really appreciate the advice and direction. It's easy to miss some of the obvious things.

I'm not sure if it's the position or quality of my pop filter, or perhaps just my overall heavy push on the P's and T's when performing, so I'll definitely work on that. I'm a bit concerned about it tbh, since I've produced some network promos and I really want the quality to be perfect. (so far, no complaints but best to be careful right?)

Overall performance WAS kind of choppy, wasn't it? I'll go much more conversational next time.

I had listened to it on my studio monitors, but they aren't the greatest quality. A couple of TASCAM VL-S5's but I didn't note any of the issues you mentioned with sibilance and noise compression. Two years in, so maybe I'm not quite as ready as I thought! :/

Thanks again, and I always appreciate the feedback.

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Click to hear TomJVoiceover's recording

New commercial demo. Thanks for the feedback!

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Peer Feedback:

I personally prefer to hear the Mercedes spot first. It's more sophisticated than the first spot, which tended to be slightly distracting with the "rough" sound effects that detracted from the voice over. Your enunciation is clear and varied throughout. I like the Traveler's Insurance spot and the Vick's spot--both which were very natural sounding and conversational. I think it's a great commercial demo!

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Click to hear Jonathan Young's recording

tired of hearing everyone I meet say "you should be in radio." so I put this together to see if the uneducated masses are right - thanks for your peer / professional input.

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Peer Feedback:

Hmmm. 50 plays and no feedback. C'mon, people, yer slakin' off!

So, the people who say "you should be in radio" don't necessarily know anything about voiceover. They hear a nice, rich baritone voice and liken it to FM DJ's or news readers. That ain't voiceover. In fact, many broadcasters who started out in radio have to break some nasty habits in order to be taken seriously as a voice artist. It ain't about the voice, but what you do with it. That "announcery" sound is still valid for some things, but it's very limited. The "natural", "real person" is what's in vogue.

However, this has potential. Did you do it yourself, or did you go into a studio with an engineer/director?

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Click to hear dwhitman's recording

Getting back into VO, and I just wanted some honest feedback on my commercial demo.

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Peer Feedback:

The recording and production quality is excellent.
The reads are intense. You are very good at doing that but it was way too in my face for my liking. All of the fast paced spots sound the same. The diamond spot and Dorcey were better as they felt more natural but was still too "announcer-ish" IMHO. I think that you do the announcer type commercials well and this may give you plenty of business.
The demo is way too long for this day and age. Most people keep their demos between 60-90 seconds max.

Peer Feedback:

Yep. Too long. Most all of the cuts sound like whole commercials. No need on a demo. Just excerpt the best parts. 7 to 12 second snippets. The going trend is 70 seconds max.

The second cut is a script (or part of a script) on the Edge Script Library. Cut it.

The third cut seems to pan back and forth, left and right. It's distracting. Keep it mono.

Bata Prostate - waaay too long a cut for a demo.

Fast Company - lots of F-farts.

There is a commonality to the delivery style to every spot, very mush like raithrover1 mentioned about it being "announcer-ish." The listener/casting person/client is going to say,"OK. I got it. This guy does high energy. Is that all?"

Production value is generally good.

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Click to hear TDodgeVO's recording

My new commercial demo is complete and would like your thoughts. I have some of my own thoughts, but would be interested in hearing what you think - positive and negative. Thank you, Theresa Enjoy the day.

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Peer Feedback:

Overall energy and reading was great. Some production issues, starting with the fireworks sound fx in the first clip - sounded more like crackling distortion to me. Tried on headphones and monitor speakers - same. The first three sounded as if they were all from the same microphone in the same studio. I guess the clicking sounds at the beginning of the jewelry spot is supposed to be mouse clicks or remote control clicks (even though modern remotes don't click), but it sounded wrong - very distracting. The two "Come on!" phrases in the last clip seemed odd - again, took me out of the moment of an otherwise great read. Need to replace one of them with, "So what are you waiting for?" or similar and I think it would be more realistic. Really great acting/reading though. :)

Peer Feedback:

I agree with everything Tom said. Fireworks/firecrackers and the crowd noise/cheering are distracting, as is the tapping in the jewelry spot. You used the same inflection, relative vocal pitch and intention both times on, "Come on!" You can use the same words, just think "What are you waiting for?" the second time. Whole different intention as the first one.

IMHO, the second spot is the best. Consider moving it up to the front. And consider moving AT&T in the #2 spot.

Good, serviceable demo. Shows range.

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Click to hear Burt Simmons's recording

My first demo script that has been edited by another voice over club member. Trying to get an idea of how to describe my voice in a profile.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi Burt,
In the beginning everyone seeks to establish themselves with a demo. Its real value is debatable. I'm on my 6th audiobook and don't even use one. I merely audition. But if you feel the need you should be less worried about how to profile yourself and more concerned with honing your VO skills. This example is not ready for prime time. Put the brakes on and make a habit of posting to the forum subjecting yourself to honest criticism of your work. When its good you will be told as much. This forum is a great workshop to grow in. VO skills do not fall into place quite so easily you have to hone them until you are consistent. By the time you acquire them you will know what sort of voice goes in your profile.

Peer Feedback:

It sounds like your editor snipped out your breath sounds and mouth noise. In listening to the second half, one common problem you have is that you completely close your mouth before taking the next intake of breath, which causes a big lip smack and nasal click. Concentrate on keeping your mouth open when you breathe between sentences and phrases.

When talking to another person, do you "hit" or "punch" your pronouns and possessives? The most glaring example here is, "...insure YOUR safety while visiting OUR facility." I would submit that the operative words here are "safety" and , secondarily, "insure"and "visiting". Punching those possessives sounds unnatural in normal conversation. It's the equivalent of poking me in the sternum with your index finger and then sticking your thumb in your own.

Same kind of thing with "...prepare YOU with a visitor's badge..." I know that YOU'RE talking to ME. No need to hammer it (the pronoun). The more operative word here is "prepare" (the action).

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Click to hear Michael Holmes's recording

Hey awesome people of EdgeStudioland. I'm Mike, I'm new to this site. I found out about it by entering this weeks competition and so far it seems like an amazing place! Here's a quick voice-reel using my new CAD E100S. Any feedback would be a great help! Many thanks! Mike.

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Peer Feedback:

Obviously a character voice demo. IMHO, it's a might too long and some of the voices and accents are either the same or quite similar. Some of the voices, though, are really quite interesting and well done. Those seem to be the more "honest" interpretations of the lines. In particular, the guy that says, "We can either make this real easy or real hard. Your choice." and "Did you see the way he looked at me? Really? You're gonna let that go?", to name two.

Thing other thing is that purely "character" voices are mixed in with "cartoon" voices. Although there might be some cross-over, they might be better as two different demo genres.

I once had a conversation with David Goldberg (owner of Edge Studio) about character voice demos. I was curious as to whether having the characters have a conversation was a good thing (a trend) or not,. His take was that it was not a good idea, unless it was done very cleverly and very, very, veeerrry well. Not sure that it works here. For one think, I can hear that they are all "you". You might consider using another voice actor for that (but don't give them the best lines).

The recording quality is fairly good, although it's a little "dry" or "raw" - without any or minimal processing FX such as normalization (the volume levels are inconsistent) and EQ (the richness of the bottom frequencies is lacking). There is also quite a bit of mouth noise and some popping plosives. Breath sounds, here and there, are probably fine for a character voice demo.

Peer Feedback:

The characters you have developed are very entertaining and so is your delivery. My thoughts would be that there are too many coming at me too fast. I would go over them, choose the ones most different from each other and shorten the whole demo. It's obvious to me that you are talented and creative enough to develop any character I wanted. I was enjoying and smiling at the beginning and then started to get bored so do shorter and leave them wanting more. I thought the production was pretty good. I saw your YouTube video on building a booth and you might be happy to know that I recognized you right away even when it was a total surprise. This means your voice is memorable.

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Click to hear Aahzz's recording

This is the demo I've put together, would love your feedback!!!!

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Peer Feedback:

Difficult to know what the focus of the demo is. Commercial? Promo? Character? Documentary? Narration? There is some cross-over between genres, but they are each their own animal. Mixing genres on a single demo is generally not a good idea.

Volume levels are all over the place from spot to spot.

You introduce yourself (slate) at the top and at the tail. And explain (twice) that it's a demo real. No need. The listener will know it's a demo reel. Just get on with it.

There's something strange with your S's. But it's inconsistent. May be a dental/speech thing or maybe it's in the EQ. Dunno.

You shouldn't use Edge Library scripts (24) or dated material. I was on Broadway when the last revival of "Showboat" was playing at the Gershwin Theatre (where "Wicked" is now) in the mid 90's. Almost anyone in the NYC Tri-State (NY, NJ, CT) area would be familiar with that and know that you didn't do that show's promo.

As for performance: They all seem kind of exaggerated, over the top and/or "in your face" punchy. I'm not getting anything that shows the "real" you. It also sounds home grown rather than professional produced.

My suggestion would be to go to VoiceBank.net and listen to different demos and different genres of demos for style, structure, delivery, production quality, etc. Not all of them are stellar, but most are very good.

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Click to hear mistervoice's recording

It's an old demo, so the content is a little out of date. Looking for feed back on my performance and so that I can put together a new and improved version.

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Peer Feedback:

You have a great range, mistervoice! You sound like a totally different person on some spots. My favorite was spot 2. You may want to try pushing the envelope even more with your new version as you clearly sound like you have the talent to go further. e.g. that quick talking disclaimer voice at the end of medical ads.

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Click to hear bridoc94's recording

produced this a couple of years ago. looking for general feedback for voice, but balancing evaluation would be greatly appreciated! Thanks!!

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Peer Feedback:

Wow, it's almost perfect. Your deep voice is great and the tone changes nicely depending on each situations. Overall, pacing and emotions are excellent.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Aahzz's recording

Trying out my commercial "big voice", looking for critiques of both the performance and the recording. Thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

Real hard sell. Even so, there are transitions in tone that could have been considered - a good vs bad, yin-yang thing - even with the "big voice" thing. You just seem angry all the way through. I'd be scared to approach Tax Talley to do my taxes. They just might throw all of my deduction receipts in my face.

Peer Feedback:

I appreciate that, and in listening back I see exactly what you mean - I need to go to a reassuring tone for the second half of this script....

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Click to hear tmac89's recording

Does this demo sound conversational? Believable? How's my delivery?

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Peer Feedback:

Up until the last cut, the deliveries sounded almost all the same - same volume, same dynamic pitch range, same vocal intensity, same pacing, same "punch".

Conversational? Not really. More like you're talking at me rather than to me. All except the last cut where you "brought it down" a little more. But it's all kind of "in your face". Did you have a certain person in mind that you were talking to for each of these cuts?

Sounds like a home made demo. The mix of the vocal and music bed is a bit off - in that your voice rides over the music bed rather than blending with it. The voice is too present and the music beds rather dull sounding in the background.

Peer Feedback:

You have a nice warm voice! I also like how you picked different types of spots to show off different styles. But I would rehearse some of these pieces more so that you can really play with your range. Think about who you are talking to or practice with a friend to help yourself sound a bit more conversational. Remember, you use different types of voices in different situations. Try recording yourself telling different types of personal stories to get a better feel for how you sound in different situations (i.e serious vs. funny vs. friendly).

Also, try to avoid overpowering your voice with the music. (Not sure if you did the mix yourself? But it's better to have a professional help with demos because they are pretty technical.)

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for the feedback. I did not do this demo myself. It was done in a studio. I had voice coaching for 20 weeks. Towards the end of that time I had a demo coach who directed me to do it this way. I don't have extra money for more coaching or for another demo, so I'll continue to practice on my own.

Thanks again,
tmac89

Peer Feedback:

IMHO, I would ask the whomever mastered the demo to re-do it with a better mix. Sorry to say, my 2 cents is that this demo will not serve you well if you shop it around as is.

Peer Feedback:

Okay it's a mix however I felt lost between first being told about a car to then being told about Mac'N'Cheese... to signing contracts... maybe leave a gap between them so they don't sound like they're flowing too much into one another.

Aside from that, your voice is clear which in my opinion is the main thing, I felt you were a little flat sounding, you've got the character there I can feel it but it's not coming through these I feel.

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Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

Thanks to all of the great comments so far, especially the reminders about transitions. I have uploaded my most recent practice demo with the changes suggested by all. I have been using the recording levels for the music set exactly the same as they are in all of the talent Agency UK demos that I have been listening to. All comments are welcome as always. It is a long road but I love the journey!

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Peer Feedback:

Nice demo. I heard the corrections in this first read . I still feel the piano could come down a little more so your voice sits on the music not in it. Other than that , nice. You have a quality voice.

Peer Feedback:

A very nice demo, very good reads. Transitions are nice and not jumpy at all.

Spot 1: That piano track I've used before, and I found it comes in really loud. It needs an a slight audio adjustment. probably no more than 0.6dB. It's still a tad too much. Great read though.

Spot 2: Nice mix, good levels. Read is good, and you hit all the right descriptive words. Sounds relaxing, and indulgent throughout, but IMHO the tag line is a bit flat or just a bit too soft. "Keep discovering... Emerates" maybe... something more inspiring or awestruck.

Spot 3: This is my favorite. You sound intelligent, knowledgeable, you nailed it.

Spot 4: Also nice.

Personally I would put spot 3 first, but that's just me. Best of luck!

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Click to hear gervaisweekes's recording

Hey everyone, I wanted to get some feedback or constructive criticism on my demo. What do you think? Gervais Weekes

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Peer Feedback:

I have to ask the question.

Was this professionally produced, or is it home grown?

My initial impression is that this is self-produced. And as such, it may not be as competitive a demo as you night want to have out there.

First of all, it's too long. The trend for commercial demos these days is not more than 70 seconds.

Secondly, there are some elocution problems. One example is right from the top:
"We unnerstan that travel means having a lot duh juggle."
In the Burst spot"
"I cn git..."
And in the drug spot:
"...you needuh start asking..."

Another giveaway that this may be a self-produced demo is the production value and quality. The VO on every spot sounds like it was done on the same mic, in the same space, with the same processing and possibly on the same day. And the music beds' blends (the mixes) are kind of off from the VO - the voice rides over everything (almost too present) and the music sounds like a separate entity, all with the same relative overall volume through out.

But, if I am mistaken, I would advise you to ask if you can re-take some of the session and have it remastered into something that might serve you better in a professional capacity.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you so much for the response. It was done at one of edge's studios but I agree with you on the quality aspect and how it came out. Thank you for your input.

Gervais

Peer Feedback:

I must say that I am very surprised that this is an Edge product. Did you go through their program? Or did you just cut the tracks in their studio? Did they engineer, produce and master it?

Again, if so, I would request that they help you re-do it to make it more competitive in the VO marketplace.

OMHO, this demo will not serve you well.

Peer Feedback:

I have to concur with James on this being a surprise if an Edge product in any way. One thing that stood out as I listened was the inclusion of a script that is clearly an Edge script library item. The "parenting" slice is here under two titles: "Anti-Drug Campaign 3" and "Anti-drug campaign.". The Curve For Men script is also in the Edge library.

The Edge coaches strongly advise against using any of the scripts from the library for a multitude of reasons...mainly because they're dated and more importantly: someone else already got that gig. It's like trying to put a Dodge Ram commercial in your file and we all know Sam Elliot's the pipes for that brand...and has been for quite a while.

There's also some pretty evident diction issues throughout. James touched on a few, but there's quite a few more. I hate to say it, but I agree with James on this being a demo that would serve you well.

Peer Feedback:

Sorry...they don't allow editing anymore for some reason... I agree with James that this demo would NOT serve you well.

Peer Feedback:

Once again, thank you all for the feedback. I will try to get another demo produced at another location.

Peer Feedback:

I know I'm late to the party but please accept my late observations. The above comments certainly have merit although I don't agree with all the studio production observations.

True there are some articulation issues present and perhaps some regionalisms that you should be aware of. But I also noticed that you were showing some diversity of character by modifying your speech from spot to spot. To me that means you have a good ear. Whether or not you've had training, I think you have a good deal of talent and natural ability. I thought the feel for much of what you have here is right on and I believe you. If you're off, it's not that far.

Best in the New Year!

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Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

Hi ya'll. Kevin again with a paid studio demo, with a producer I met over the weekend. I have a few of these that I'm not so sure about. This one I was a lot less confident with, trying to tap into some family excitement. I think I got this script from here actually, so I won't bother posting it. Performance: Excitement, Family entertainment, Positivity Quality: Timing and pace.

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Peer Feedback:

The recording quality is good. I can clearly hear your voice over the music.
The positivity and excitement in your voice is very good and not over the top. The pace is good at the beginning. I can imagine seeing each show flash across my television screen. But it slows/or excitement drops a bit towards the end when you say"... all you favorite blockbuster movies."

Peer Feedback:

Biggest reason not to use this on a demo is that the shows are really dated. They wouldn't be on ABC anymore, but probably in syndication on ABC Family or one of the off-brand networks like The WB. Better to surf around for shows that are more contemporary. And as a rule of thumb, resist to urge to even use Edge scripts, they're just too familiar as teaching tools in the VO world. Even Edge will tell you that.

Almost every phrase ended in a downward inflection. You might consider "lifting" the phrases to show the "excitement" with a big smile. The three shows mentioned are sitcoms, so they'd be amusing to watch - but don't laugh in the copy (recording) yourself.

Peer Feedback:

Dated was exactly the word I was thinking of when I was reading this script, but I figured, why not?

"favorite blockbuster movies." does sound flat now that you mention it.

I think I'll move on to some more 'up to date scripts' with newer products / networks in the future.

I'll try lifting on the end, but I'm not exactly sure how to do it.

I hear: "with SPECIAL episodes of all your favorite series" (no rising tone)

Lifted: "with SPECIAL episodes of all your favorite SERIES." (rising intonation?)

maybe I'm overthinking it :P

much appreciation for the comments

Peer Feedback:

Yeah. Kind of what I was thinking about. But attack it right from the get-go.

"...and ABC's got the STUFF -^"

The show titles were fine.

Then draw out the network a little to billboard it with a big smile.

"All right here. On A-B-C."

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Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

Hi guys, Kevin in Bangkok. It's been a while since I've had an opportunity to post here. I've been getting some work in Television Imaging recently, so I went to visit a producer to make a few demos. Performance: Troubling / Concerned Quality: Studio Demo

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Peer Feedback:

Great voice! And I liked the delivery, especially your choice of removing the raspy resonance from your voice when you hit "Do they need us to get tough" and bringing it back in at the end. I detected a little sound reflection, though. I'm not sure if reverb was added on purpose or if it was as a result of recording in a less than ideal sound booth.

Peer Feedback:

I'm assuming that this was a product of your producer and not done in your home studio?

Don't know what the common practice is for imaging, but the reverb doesn't bother me. If that's what the network or station wants, that's out of your hands.

Quality is really good. Same with the delivery. To my aged ears, you're clicking on all cylinders.

Only quibble I may have is with the music. The major key and solo guitar doesn't quite seem to fit the message of the copy. I would have preferred something more ominous, driving and in a minor key to support the idea of American Justice. That might push the copy a little swifter too - closer to 12 or 15 seconds.

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Peer Feedback:

You have a splendid voice. A lot of potential. You need to work on perfecting your pronounciation. Not "digni tay," but "dig na tee." Not we expanded to "otha countries," but "other."

Your sound is really good.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks for your input, John.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks. This was helpful; I'll play around the sequencing of the the spots.

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Hello everyone, I am brand new to this VO world and was hoping for a little feedback from the experienced. This is literally the first thing I have done. I might have jumped the gun a little by jumping right into "Demo's" already but I figured I should start with some sort of demo material to show what I can do. Any suggestions/comments on if it's a good place to start or other direction would be greatly appreciated. Thanks, Paul

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Peer Feedback:

For a first post it is pretty darn good. Your pace and tone seems to lend itself well to the script. The music bed works well too. The only problem I have is the sound effects. They are too much of a distraction for me. The take away from the story that you were telling and seemed forced and loud. I think it would be better without the effects.
Fantastic read though. Well done!

Peer Feedback:

Thanks very much for the feedback! ... I had a similar feeling about the sound effects after the fact. I really appreciate the comments ... thanks again. Paul

Peer Feedback:

Nice warm read, good pace. The effects don't add much in that kind of spot. Good job.

Peer Feedback:

It was interesting finding this script because it's one of the first that I tried. It's much more difficult than it seems because of the audience -- you're talking to older people but you're not a senior. I tried to go for a feeling of "Hey, Mom and Dad, this is where you guys should go." Ultimately, I couldn't get it right, but you did. I agree with others that the SFX don't work. But you found the spot I couldn't hit. Nice warm tone and perfect pacing.

Peer Feedback:

Really nice read and impressive for your first VO. The one thing I'd suggest is to add a bit more smile to the read. Literally smile during the read and it will translate to more joy infused in your delivery. Smile more in appropriate areas and this will add emphasis to those, as well. Keep up the great work!

Peer Feedback:

Very nice for a first go at it. I agree that the additional sound effects are a bit much but it was a very pleasant read.

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Hey there everyone. I have put together a radio imaging demo from some of the spots I've done. I am looking for some constructive criticism. Feel free to pick it apart and let me know what you think. No sugar coating. Haha. Thanks.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi Chad! Your demo sounds really great EXCEPT that you used the flanging and reverb effect on the entire thing, it's too much. Just use it on a couple of the sweepers and leave the rest alone. This could be a great demo.

Just so you know that I know what I'm talking about I did rock/CHR radio for over 20 years and did TONS of imaging for more stations than I can remember.

Peer Feedback:

Alright. This was put together from different spots I have done. All I did was arrange them. I can see about going back and editing the original audio. Thanks so much.

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I posted this same demo a few days ago and got some feedback - all good points.... I've re-recorded it taking into account the critique given earlier. Upon listening back to it with the comments in mind, the first version DID sound a little scary ...so I've lightened up the opening line considerably, and spliced back in the 'Pah' sound that I inadvertently edited out of 'help' when debreathing... thanks guys.

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Peer Feedback:

Third time's a charm!
This is a winner!
Slap it on your demo.
"Run it up a flagpole and see if anyone solutes." - Stan Freeberg

Peer Feedback:

That is why I am addicted to this forum already! You get great direction and it helps to make a really good read like this. Great job on changing it up!

Peer Feedback:

I don't know why this reading was such a bear for me to get a satisfactory recording...I actually did five different versions of this shortened spot, each time thinking 'this is the one', and then found something that just didn't sound right to me...and it's only three sentences! lol... but, yeah, I think this sounds good. Thanks for the help, as always... cheers!

Peer Feedback:

Self direction is one of the most difficult things to do. Everyone struggles with it. Sometimes you can loose perspective, which is why another set or sets of ears are helpful.

Case in point. I had an audition at a casting house in NYC. I always show up early to look at the copy before my actual audition time, because you never get the copy beforehand (and most times they make you leave it there before you leave). The copy was obviously meant to be funny, so I practiced it to "hit" the joke. When I got into the booth, the casting director said that the client wanted it played deadpan straight and not to try to pull the joke. I got 3 takes and had to flatten it out even more on consecutive takes. I was happy that the casting director was patient enough with me to give me 3 takes, but I didn't get the job. I haven't heard the spot yet, a year after the audition. It was probably never made.

The lesson? Make a choice, but don't get "locked in" to one thing. Be prepared and flexible enough to change on a dime.

But when you're alone and left to your own devices, step away (if you have the time) and listen with objective, virgin ears. An be prepared to like or dislike what you hear and take another crack at it.

Three little lines can be rougher to nail than a 30, 60 or 90 second spot.

Peer Feedback:

Check out the answer to your FX stack question in my Odyssey Putters post above.

Peer Feedback:

Check my response to your REAPER comment in my Odyssey Putters post above.

Peer Feedback:

Glen,

If you like, I can help you with some REAPER things if you'll provide me with your regular email address. Just stick it in my Odyssey Putters post, if you're cool with that.

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I re-recorded EdgeStudio's Nightmare Asthma into a 10sec demo spot using the rewrite suggested by daveromick (Thanks James!). Here I'm using my Scarlett Audio 2i2 Studio package (2i2 interface/mic/headphones) recorded in my 3'x3' audio booth. I tweaked the mic position/distance again for this recording and I think I found a sweet spot for my voice/mic combo. I definitely like the sound of this setup better than the last one I did with my 'travel' Yeti - not knocking the Yeti, it's a great mic for what it does, but I like the extra crispness I get with this setup. What say you?

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Peer Feedback:

Recording quality is fine. The mix with the music is good as well.

What I'm getting is a spooky story or an slasher film trailer rather than a PSA type message. IMHO, speaking as a concerned parent would serve this better than scaring the listener. It's leading up to a positive message. There are two (or three) parts to this message. Concern (problem). Answer (solution). Call to action (call this number). Nice and open and honest.

Here's an example of what I mean in a slightly different commercial genre. It's a piece of copy that's used for an on-camera commercial class, but it works for VO as well.

(closeup on face)
I had a headache. (knitted brow, frown and a scrunched up face - obviously in pain)
I took some Advil. (neutral expression - eyebrows up - resting face)
My headache's gone! (big smile with the eyes and mouth)

Peer Feedback:

The quality and the mix is good.
I agree with jamesromick. It sounds a bit scarier than it should be and the edit at the end of the word help is too abrupt.
The gap between the first and second sentence seems out of place. Nightmare - for a kid with asthma.
I think with a few tweaks, it would sound awesome!

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Going for warm and friendly, but, also somewhat somber, since of course, it deals with the emotional and financial challenges of losing a loved one. In the last sentence, it's a little more upbeat in order to convey the message "call this number for some encouraging information..." Here's the script: Funerals are a very difficult thing for a family to go through. Besides the sorrow, loved ones are left with the decisions, the details and the enormous cost of arranging a funeral. That’s why Funeral Advantage was created; To help protect your family in time of need. It pays your loved ones up to $20,000 cash, immediately for funeral and other expenses. Funeral expenses keep rising and easily cost over $9,000. But, the most government benefits will pay is only $255, leaving your loved ones the financial burden to pay the rest. Get the facts today that could help keep your family financially protected. Call 1-800-781-4700, that’s 1-800-781-4700. Don’t put it off. Call now!

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Peer Feedback:

I bought it! Nice pacing, good choice of music bed, well-read! It's not an easy script to self-direct, as you mentioned - having to keep upbeat with a positive message framed by an emotional scenario. I liked the change in tone when you got to the branding and the slight pause after "in time of need." Nothing critical to say, but I'll check back to see what other comments are left.

Peer Feedback:

Good stuff, here's my 2 cents. You kind of rush over the paying "$255" and the following "financial burden to pay the rest" mark. Also your tone jumps quite a bit at the following sentence "Get the facts today." A note I feel like I would get from one of the coaches if I were doing this piece is that if your main focus is on the tone like you mention in your description, instead of "going for warm and friendly but also somewhat somber" try to put your focus more on "problem, solution" which is what this piece is. Because also if you focus on "problem, solution" you'll still cover the tone because the problem is funeral (somber) but the solution adds the relief and warm tone. Also keep in mind, this would probably be in daytime tv and your audience is probably the elderly, so you may need to draw out that more concise problem and solution. That's at least my teacher's voice in my head but overall good work, keep it up!

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Hey friends! Just mixed a new demo. The only one I'm feeling iffy about is the "Roblox Developer's Conference" read, but I wanted to get an opinion or two before I cut it. Would love to hear your comments/feedback on the demo as a whole as well Thanks! Max

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Peer Feedback:

Maybe rethink the demo. It's kind of a mix of genres.

1 - Hard sell commercial (the store's name kind of got swallowed - couldn't make it out, even after several plays).
2 - PSA? Employee guide? Not sure what this is, but it doesn't sound like a commercial.
3 - Commercial for a community church? Or a narration for a public interest story or video? Not sure what category this fits into or where it's going.
4 - Roblox - IMHO, the best produced spot on the demo, but not for a commercial demo. It would fit better on a corporate, E-Learning or narration demo.
5 - SkySwoop - telephony should be on a telephony demo. IMHO, it doesn't sound like a commercial, but it could with a little more text. There's a finality to it - like it's meant to be a tag. It says, "This is the end of my demo."

All of the spots are very clever and original and well produced. But that can also be a drawback, in that you're advertising how clever you are which overshadowes showing how you would approach an actual product/service spot's copy. The demo, with a mix of genres, may be serviceable in a small, local market, but to compete in the bigger pond, as a strictly commercial demo, you'll have to have cuts that reflect actual commercial products/services (real or imagined) and have the spots sound like you'd actually done them (which these do - to a degree). There is a little cross-over with genres - PSA's, and program promos sometimes appear on commercial demos - but this mix is somewhat confusing for a strictly commercial demo, IMHO.

Only my 2c. That and $2.50 will get you a Venti sized Starbucks coffee.

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I'm a new artist and looking for feedback on one of my demo reads. I produced this in my studio in pro tools with original music by me.

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Peer Feedback:

Hey, your music bed is really nice. IMHO, it could be dipped or ducked just a touch under the VO - the music swallows the VO up a little.

And because of that, I'm missing and/or misunderstanding the ends of a few your sentences.

Don't know if your using a de-esser or some other plugin or if it's your natural speech pattern, but words like "exclamation", "sports" and whatever the word after "luxury" is are a little dull on the X and S's. Also most, if not every sentence dips down in inflection at the end - musically on almost the exact same pitch. Switch that up a little.

Recording quality and production value are very good.

Peer Feedback:

really nice pipes.
the music bed was a bit too forward in the mix, I think. Set it back a little more.
nice.

cheers,
DS

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Hi VO Peers, Here is my narration demo, hot off the presses from post production. Seeking some feedback. As always, thank you in advance.

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Peer Feedback:

Hey Mmack,

Really big fan of this demo.

Spot 1: Accounting
This is my fave out of the bunch. You sound like someone with decent experience in this area. Some gaps in the middle of statements. ("But sometimes.... you can get so bogged down in paperwork... that you don't have time to focus on the bigger picture." / "So we developed a platform... that will help you better connect to your clients"). Maybe close those gaps a bit.

Spot 2: Bose: A nice description of the entertainment system. Good pop words. Not as many noticeable gaps in the middle of statements but there are still there.

Spot 3: Vermont: Similar tone of voice to the Bose spot. Perhaps a different more neighborly tone of voice might show a larger range for your demo? Change the pitch up a bit and see what it sounds like!

Spot 4: Derek Jeter: Similar voice to the accounting spot as well. If you listen to them back to back, (the first and last spot) you'll see what I mean.

I do like your reading voice, and I think you express what each spot is trying to convey really well! Good acting all around.

Audio quality sounds good too. I didn't notice any problems with the quality. It does start kind of jarringly with "AS AN accountant!" but that's just me :)

Best of luck out there :)

Peer Feedback:

IMHO, the two best spot are #1 & #4.

But, again, it sounds like you went directly from the commercial demo session straight into the narration demo session back to back. It has all of the same production problems that I mentioned on commercial demo. Did you take a break now and then in your session? Sometimes you have to step away and shake out and begin anew.

Delivery wise, there is a little more personal investment to the spots, especially 1 & 4. I get that you understand accounting and admire Derek Jeter. Probably why KDavies pointed out that they sound very similar.

Still, all in all, it should have some contrasting variation from spot to spot.

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Hi VO peers, Just received my commercial and narration demos back from post production and was hoping for some feedback. As always, thank you in advance.

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Peer Feedback:

Hey Mmack

Kevin here with a little critique of this demo. I always want to show my range for commercial scripts. Lets take a look:

Spot 1: Miller light

Sounds like you started a character with a Bostonian accent, (Ya drink beair because ya like da taste a' beair) and then by the end of that spot you lapse back into your regular reading voice (right around the word 'flavor').

If the script asks for a character, then throw it in there and follow the script. But I distinctly hear the first accent disappear and blend into the second tone of voice, and it becomes obvious that it's the same person.

I liked the accent you did! Really nice!

Spot 2: BMW 6

Some of the pop words were a bit strange for me (unique STYLE, PERFORMANCE gets your HEART racing) and then "all new" kinda fell flat for me.

Spot 3: Boys and Girls Club

This is my favorite spot. Bang on. It's a heartfelt kind of advert and i think your tone of voice is really good for that.

Spot 4: Sony 4K

How excited are you... REALLY? IMHO he doesn't sound super excited about that baseball game in 4K!

"when i watch the game on my new Sony 4k HDR TV, it's even better than being at the stadium. BECAUSE I NEVER GOTTEN SEATS LIKE THIS!"

I kinda feel bad for the guy for not being able to afford decent tickets. But the T.V doesn't sound all that interesting, which is the product you're trying to pitch after all and not the baseball seats.

Spot 5: Axe Body-wash

This advert sounded alright. There is a rhetorical question in the middle that I think you may have missed.

"But what's gonna happen when you take them off?"

The tone you choose for this doesn't really sound like a loaded question at all, but more like an open ended statement. Very flat.

I think add little more humour / tounge in cheek is the key to that line. Imagine being being completely naked in front of someone, getting intimate, and knowing you probably stink. How embarrassing right?

Hope that helps, and best of luck! I think you have a future in the industry! Keep up the good work.

Peer Feedback:

I would like to preface my comment by asking if this was an Edge produced demo.

If so or if not, how much coaching, prep and studio time did you have before cutting the demo?

Was the demo done in-studio or did you provide the VO from your home studio to have it produced somewhere?

Did you have get direction while recording the demo?

I'll explain why I ask.

First of all, I agree with nearly everything KDavies has said.

I will add that that all of the VO (the quality of the sound and the delivery) sounds very much the same on all of the spots. So the question that comes to mind is: Did you cut all of the spots on the same mic, with all of the same settings, in the same studio, all in one session? Because that's what it sounds like. One of Edge's philosophies is that, even though it may be the case that the demo is cut in one session, it is mastered in a way that "sounds" like it was done in different studios at different times and with slightly varying processing FX. Even the music beds are mixed differently, which doesn't seem to be the case here. The VO lies too "present" over the music beds rather than "blending" into them.

The first 3 spots sound nearly identical - in vocal quality, dynamic range (both volume and pitch), inflection, intensity and delivery. That's one side of you and your delivery. We get that from the first spot. Move on. The next one needs to show some contrast.The fifth is nearly the same as well. The fourth has just a titch (a technical term) more energy, but as KDavies wrote, "How excited are you... REALLY? IMHO he doesn't sound super excited about that baseball game in 4K! " It just isn't hitting on all cylinders. I would venture tp guess that a casting person would pass on this one as soon as the second spot begins to play.

IMHO, this is not a very competitive demo, sorry to say. The spots (the copy) vary, but the delivery and audio quality do not. It's mostly rather flat. At the very least, you should ask whomever produced it for another session, gratis.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks for the feedback KDavies. I appreciate the time taken to critique and cannot say enough about how valuable this forum is to our voice over world! In hindsight, maybe I should have spent a few extra $$ and went with Edge.

Hi James- I truly cannot begin to express how appreciative I am for your feedback. I think that if I had been happy with my demos, I more than likely would not have posted them on the forum for feedback, however as you might imagine, I was less than thrilled with the final product. So here are the answers to your questions:

1- No, Edge did not produce the demo.
2- A few months of coaching and (3) 30 minute prep sessions
3- Demo was done in studio (which was extremely hot and stuffy)
4- Yes, I received direction while recording the demo
5- All were cut on the same mic, in the same studio, during the same session

I will be requesting a redo and hope I do not receive any push back.

Peer Feedback:

Hey MMack

I think it's a good idea to re-record. It's not the quality, but the RANGE of the demo that seems to be lacking. Some of the same spots can be used, but I think you'll note a huge improvement if you have CONTRASTING adverts.

Try the following:
Spot 1: Conversational / Explainer
Spot 2: SUPER EXCITING PRODUCT
Spot 3: Neighborly heartfelt
Spot 4: INTENSE / HARD SELL (video games are good for this one)
Spot 5: Sophisticated / High society
Spot 6: FUNNY / HUMOROUS / HILARITY (optional if you can fit it in)

If you're having trouble showing emotional range (like myself) invest in a couple of acting classes, and make sure your instructor understands your purpose for being there. I went to 2 or 3 groups before I found one that had an instructor that knew I wanted to express a greater emotional range. Singing lessons helped me too (more than you might think with emotion). I'm reading everyday, and trying trying trying to improve that range.

Cheers, and best of luck!

Kev

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This is a Spanish Children short story demo. Any comment or opinion will be highly appreciated. Thanks in advance for your time and attention. Gracias de antemano por el tiempo y atención. Saludos.

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Peer Feedback:

Hola!

First off, I should probably admit I don't speak a word of Spanish, so I won't be commenting about your performance.

Recording quality:

I would adjust the audio level for the music you have chosen. It drowns you out several times, making you difficult to hear.

Secondly, watch out that your levels don't peak out past 0 dB. As your recording make sure you can see your monitor (or PC screen) to make sure you're not in the red. When you do the child like voice, I can hear you peaking and that will cause audio problems.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks. Will do. I was not in red. I really appreciate your feedback. I was pretty much looking for the recording quality input. Lovely day! I'll make sure about the zero decibels.

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please give me a honest critique

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Peer Feedback:

Wow! You have a great Booming voice. Very professional sounding.

Peer Feedback:

Nice variety in your choice of copy. Good mixture of voices and paces. You have a great smoothness you use well.

Peer Feedback:

Kind of a mix of genres - promo, radio imaging, commercial. Of course there is some cross-over. But judging from these spots, it sounds like promo and imaging predominate this demo. If it's intended as a commercial demo, it kind of misses the mark because only 3 spots sound like actual commercial copy. - Ponderosa, Bryers (which is too recognizable as an Edge Library practice script and really shouldn't be on any demo) and Miller Draft.

BTW - the Borden Ice Cream spot also is very dated. The product no longer exists, hasn't for quite some time. The company name still exists, although they were bought out by KKR in 1995 and divested, and is primarily known for milk and cheese products (and glue). The point being that a commercial demo needs to reflect current trends and products.

Most of the spots sound very "announcery" - the exceptions are the actual commercials, and those may still have too much "voice" to them in that they sound like a radio guy (as opposed to a guy next door type) delivering them.

Peer Feedback:

I like the variety that you give with each spot.

Peer Feedback:

nice reel. you have skills.

cheers!
DS

Peer Feedback:

PROFESSIONAL. Performance as well as Sound quality. Guess you already are getting paid. Kudos.

Peer Feedback:

Awesome, the country accent was amazing! Not over the top and it sounded pretty authentic. Very nice work.

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Click to hear austinbealsVO's recording

Hey there! This is my first demo, using a few projects I've done for my (day job) work. It's a pretty "general" demo, but as I start booking more work, I'll create individual demos for "explainer videos," phone systems, commercials, etc. Any initial thoughts or feedback?

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Peer Feedback:

nice reel, competitive enough to use on P2P sites. It's not perfect - I heard a couple pops. I think it will have a fairly short shelf life as you keep developing your craft.

I like your millennial voice, which is in great demand these days.

best,
DS

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I think this sounds very professional! Wow! Of course, I am a newbie in this
field, but to my untrained ear, this sounds great.

Peer Feedback:

Wow, fantastic feedback. Thank you, both! And I like the "millennial voice" descriptor. Never thought of that (even though that fits me completely).

Any other thoughts on branding / voice type? I'm still trying to get a feel for what parts might suit me best. I recognize there isn't a ton of variety here, but are there any other adjectives that come to mind? Warm, friendly, positive, etc.? (Of course, some of this would change based on the type of read, especially in commercials.)

Once again, thank you for the help!

Peer Feedback:

Little bit of a plosive popping problem through out. Mostly P's and B's.

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I tweaked this a little and had it mastered. Will it fly? Thanks.

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Peer Feedback:

Another good one.

I had just a little problem with some S's being a little dull - probably an EQ thing. Examples:

1st spot - "... lift(s) up all American(s)."
2nd spot - The last word "pocket(s)"
3rd spot - "ar(s)enic", "chemical(s)", "invi(s)ible" and "tastle(ss)"
4th spot - "hi(s)tory", the first "doe(s)n't", "at lea(s)t", (s)ame way"

It just seems an odd inconsistency, because some of the same words (or words around those words) with S's are sharp and clear. Maybe even a mic proximity thing. Dunno. Because if you turned your head slightly away from the mic's sweet spot, it may have dulled the S pickup of those words.

Peer Feedback:

great reel. really really nice job.
DS

Peer Feedback:

Nice job. Your vocal interpretation for each spot is great.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks, guys. I appreciate your kind words and your critiques.

James, I went back over the demo and listened to all of the spots you pointed out. I could definitely hear several of them but not the rest. I tend to over articulate "S," so my mastering engineer may have put a "de-esser" on it. Thanks for pointing that out.

Best - Jim

Peer Feedback:

De-essers can sometimes be be overly applied. Sometimes it's better to adjust those things in the EQ by isolating the narrow band of frequencies your S's make and tweaking them a little.

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Any thoughts, friends?

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Peer Feedback:

Bravo!!! You are definitely a pro!!!

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Thanks, Cynthia - I appreciate your kind words.

Peer Feedback:

It's a keeper. Very well done.

Only one thing that caught my aged ears. There was a little mouth click after "long lasting" in the Duracell spot which can probably be surgically edited out.

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It is clear, you have done this before! Your sound is spot on, and your choice of music was superb!

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Thanks, again. James, I heard that mouth click!!! Thanks for pointing that out.

Best - Jim

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Playing around with a genre that might fit me well. Appreciate any feedback on the performance / technical issues. I am hoping to get a piece similar to this in a demo recording.

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I like the quality of your voice, your expression, and pacing. I sounds to me like there is just a trace of a regional accent, maybe New England, not sure. It also sounds like you are working to lose it, and you're almost there.

Sounds like you bumped the mic right after you were done reading.

Respectable audio quality.

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Thanks for the feedback, sspeheger. You are right on both counts about the slight regional accent.

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You have a pleasant voice that might lend well to this type of read, but your overall tone was much to somber and the pace was too slow. I think we can agree this isn't a promo for a monster truck rally, but the copy suggests that Dupont is an industry leader with an eye on the future - "solving global problems." This is exciting stuff and requires a sense of momentum. The music choice doesn't help - it doesn't move the script forward or add anything - possibly even drags the read down. Again - great voice, good inflection on many sentences, good variation in tone - but Dupont propels the world to a better place (at least in their mind), so we need to hear that.

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agree with Tom J: too slow and sombre for a corporate internal video or some kind of web marketing video. Also some midwest regionalism "...is a science comb-puh-nee".

and I don't get the spanish guitar music either. this definitely not a romantic script, or even a heart-tugging emotive script.

recording quality is good.

hope that helpful,
DS

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Tom and Dave, thanks for the critiques. Good points. Appreciate your time in helping me improve.

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I am just getting a start up with professional VO work and wanted some variation so I threw this on my demo for a character voice. Feedback please...

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a Woody Allen (maybe a hint of Charlie Day) ant - I can hear it.
nice job.

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Great character voice. Good to include.

However, the recording quality is a little sub par for demo production. Some room echo and extraneous ticks and noises, either from mouth noise and/or hard edits.

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Dave and James. Thanks for the feedback. That's encouraging for the character notes.
And kind of in line with what I thought on the recording quality. I'm in the process of researching new equipment. So this objective take is very helpful on what your hearing. I have a couple of others to submit that I think will receive the same sort of notes on the recording quality. Thanks.

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A lot of people have this idea that, "If I get better equipment, it'll sound better." But the bestest mic, interface, DAW, FX plugins and computer will only sound as good as the recording environment will allow. If your room is live and untreated (not sound deadened), even top of the line equipment still ain't gonna sound good. A crummy, cheap USB mic sounds great in a properly sound deadened environment. Put your investment into treating your space.

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Thanks James. Do you recommend any specific sources for this sound deadening? It seems there are many sources out there claiming they have the best materials; get their consultation, etc. I am actually going to be finishing my basement and will have a spare bedroom down there that will double as my recording area. I planned on framing the walls to have sound insulation in it (so many material options there) and then possibly have some portable room dividers made of acoustical panels or such to set up for recording record. Still noodling the design and materials. I've seen simple recommendations as moving blankets, but would like to make a little more aesthetically pleasing.

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Trying a new genre, and wanted to see what the feedback was with this character?

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Thank you for the feedback gheilweil66! Re-listening I can certainly see what you are saying, or should I say hear what you are writing? Haha! I appreciate the feedback and will certainly take it into consideration when I rerecord it.

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You put so much character into it and made it a lot of fun!. I would say the tempo seemed to be a little too slow in some places with pauses being maybe a bit too long, too frequently in the beginning. Then towards the end the tempo should jump up, which it did, but I feel like maybe it jumped just a tad too far.

Edit: You're welcome! I'm just glad if I can hear and report on anything that assists you. It really was a fun, well performed piece and I can't wait to hear more from you!

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I really like this rendition of this script (you didn't include it, but I've heard it done so many different ways).
It almost reminds me of Roddy Mcdowell.

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I went in a studio and had this recorded. Is the music to loud? Is it professional enough?

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Some major sins in this "demo." Technical quality sounds fine and is better than most submissions on the forum. In the first segment, you leaned toward over-articulation which took away from a more casual, natural feel. The mixes could be tweaked to let your voice come forward a bit more...but it's not far off.

Sin # 1: Mixing genres on a single demo. No one does that with success. A talent agent or producer taking auditions would want to hear how you do on ONE genre (specifically the one they're looking for a talent for) and not multiple types of reads in a single minute "reel."

Sin # 2: DO NOT USE THE EDGE SCRIPTS!!!! Just don't do it. These jobs were done by someone else, they're known scripts and it SCREAMS "I'm a beginner!"

I hope it didn't cost you much to record this because essentially, it's useless if you have any real hope of booking jobs professionally with any real producer at the switch making the talent decisions. DO NOT SUBMIT THIS in hopes of finding work or an agent. As I said, it screams amateur.

It's best to get some coaching, work up some scripts that NO ONE ELSE could have done since they will be YOUR scripts and no one else's and save your money and do a separate demo for each genre you're hoping to book a job within. It's a harsh reality, but generic demos don't work with the big dollar studios/agencies.

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TX Tom, first of all thank you for your feedback.
1. I was not aware that I could not use Edge scripts, I thought that's why they were there for free range and access.

2. I was coached through this demo and was not advised against the genre mixing. Actually it was encouraged. I guess it's a matter of preference.

3. Yes, I am still learning and growing in this business and looking forward to the new and exciting opportunities.

4. Ironically even with all the sins that you said were committed in this demo, I did manage to garner two gigs from it.

5. Your tips are duly noted. When you know better, you do better.

6. Oh, by the way my agent approved this demo.

7. Again, thank you for your feedback.

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To piggyback on TxTom's comments, and taking into consideration your own comments, I will add my 2c and offer up some questions.

First. What market are you in (meaning nationally, regionally and/or locally)? Is your agent representative of only that market, and/or are you getting larger market (regional or national) auditions through that agency? Does that agency use this demo (on their website or as a link to you own website) as a representative sample of your work? Did you get your gigs as a result of this demo or through a separate audition process? Are you using this demo on the P2P sites and are you having any success with getting auditions?

Next. Who (or what company/service, such as Edge or Such A Voice) coached you through the process? (No need to provide names, but offer a general idea of what was offered.) How much coaching (number of sessions, days, weeks, months) did you receive before you cut this demo? Did you pick the scripts or did they? Did you check out their references, testimonials and/or examples of their other clients and/or their demos and/or their success/track record in the VO industry? Was it a package deal - so many coachings culminating in a "professional" demo? Did it cost you more than $700 - $800? (No need to mention the actual amount.)

Third. Was the demo done in a studio that actually produces VO demos as opposed to a music production house? Did you get direction during the session (from your agent, coach, or the engineer)?

I ask all of these questions, not to be insulting or demeaning, but merely to gain perspective on your process, the amount of time you've put into cultivating your VO career, the "advice" you've been given as to the nature of the VO business, and what you expect (or might expect) to gain from this recording as a "demo".

To TxTom's point as to "mixing genres" - Most reputable coaches, services (like Edge, Such A Voice, etc.) would advise you that it is not a good or common practice in the wider (regional and national) markets to do so. Each genre of demo (commercial, narration, promo, character voice, eLearning, telephony, etc,) are their own animal, with variations of styles within a single genre itself. Yes, there is some crossover - promos, PSA's and character voices are sometimes included on commercial demos, for instance. But by and large they have their own type of content and styles of delivery. Mixing them all up into a single demo may be somewhat puzzling to a perspective casting person or client, as there are several different delivery styles and attitudes even within, say, a commercial demo. Having only one commercial cut limits the listener into thinking that "Oh, this person is only capable of doing this kind of delivery." And if a commercial producer has listens to a narration or eLearning cut before even getting to a commercial cut, they more than likely won't even take the time and delete it. After all, they're looking to cast for a commercial VO, so they're thinking "Why did this person send me a narration or eLearning demo?"

As to the script selection. It wasn't implied that you've stolen or appropriated scripts from the Edge Script Library. Those scripts, of course, are free for anyone to use. But even Edge will advise you not to use their Library scripts as demo material - that they are mainly for practice and teaching purposes. Frankly, they are too well known as such within the larger VO community and those familiar with them (agents, casting people, P2P's, reputable coaches, etc.) hear that it really does scream "amateur" to the larger VO community. And most of them are dated - not current - anyway.

Generally, the recording quality is fairly good. But the structure (especially the fade-in's and fade-out's) aren't what demos of a "current" style sound like - those trends are more of the bygone era of the 70's and 80's. To hear what current trends of professional demo production sound like, go to VoiceBank.net and listen to some. Most are very good and professionally done, some not so much. Every major agency in the US and Canada, Union and Non-Union, has their client list and their demos on there, broken down into their separate genres. It's how the industry works.

And so, I may be wrong in my presumptions (and I often am), but my impression is that you are located in a suburb of a semi-major metropolis - but not close to NYC, LA, Chicago or Atlanta. That you're an African-American woman. That you have had some coaching, but that the coach more stroked your ego (you were told you had a wonderful voice for VO) and was a little patronizing ("Great read!") rather than professionally critical. That so many coaching sessions were offered which culminated in a "professionally produced" demo as a package at a set price and that that price seemed quite reasonable and affordable. That the studio (if indeed you went to a studio) was either a local radio station, TV station or a music producing facility rather than a place where the sound engineer specifically produces VO. That you're competing in a local market, that the 2 jobs you've booked were for local businesses and that those jobs weren't particularly lucrative. But those two clients heard something about your voice and delivery that was "just right" for what they were looking (listening) for. And that you didn't spend a whole lot on the production of this demo.

The pluses are that you have a lovely voice, a little urban and earthy with a pleasant tone. You read and interpret pretty well, with a somewhat relaxed style and you have a basic grasp of the delivery styles of a few different genres.

That said: IMHO, this demo will not serve you well at the more competitive levels of the VO industry. It indicates, as TxTom suggested, that you an eager, but inexperienced beginner. That your agent "approved" of this demo and that your coach did not advise you against mixing genres begs me to question their judgement, understanding and standing within the VO industry. IMHO, you should have been better advised all the way around (and from all parties involved) - from beginning to end - if you (and they) truly want (you) to be competitive and succeed in the VO industry.

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Hello Jamesromick,,

I must say you shared a mouth full and way to much for me to respond to at this time; however, I appreciate your feedback and my only guess for you sharing all of this is that you either half way care about me getting on track with my v/o career or that you are nosey and have nothing else to do. Either way, they are points well taken and what I need, I will keep, and the rest, well you know. But to address just a couple of your questions, the gigs were a result of the demo, a professional engineer listened and guided me through it, got paid quite well, yes it's on the agents website, I've gotten several auditions and paid gigs, not necessarily from this particular demo as this one is a new one but from others. Not the only v/o work that I've done and no they were not local. The demo was done in a professional studio and not a music studio. Why did the coach and agent guide me in this direction, don't know, again it may be a matter of preference/style and yes I do live very close to a couple of the cities that you mentioned. As I mentioned earlier I am still learning the business and happened to have had some wonderful successes and opportunities along the way. No one has all the answers and there's more than one way to skin a cat. I posed the question about the demo, because I only want the best for myself and will continue to strive for it. This is not the end all, I am constantly seeking out great advice and coaching. But since I posed the question, I only feel like I have been beat up on, polarized, reprimanded and scolded for trying to get helpful thoughts and opinions. I have no doubt that I will be successful at this business by way of extensive training and proper coaching. There is so much to learn and I know I am on the right path for doing it despite..... Again, thank you for your extensive reply. I wish you the best in whatever your endeavors maybe.

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Well, it sounds like you have it all worked out then. Good luck with all that success, maybe ?

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Beating you up or reprimanding you wasn't the intent with either post. The Edge scripts are there to be used as you wish. Edge coaches who are preparing people for a demo will sternly advise them against the use of commercials that have been done. Someone else already GOT that gig. Other well known coaches will also tell you to come up with your own scripts. For commercials and PSAs they don't even have to be full scripts as you'll just be taking snippets from the larger whole. But the edge scripts are dated, they're generally from well-known spots that someone else did. Like...why try and re-do a Dodge Truck ad when a very well-known actor already did that and you'll likely sound second-rate because the listener already has that spot in their head.

If your coach actually ADVISED and ENCOURAGED you to use scripts from the Edge library, I personally wouldn't use that coach. Sounds like they want to take the quickest and easiest route instead of the BEST route.

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Any thoughts? And NOT from you, wengdongdong!!!

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Hey jimbobway
Great character voice! Sounds ready for prime time.
BillH
P.S. Report that ***hole "wengdongdong" to webmaster@edgestudio.com. I checked and he/she/it has done
this 70 other times. I deleted my post yesterday that had comment
from "wengdongdong". Some jerk trying to be funny and failing! I
reported to webmaster this a.m. If enough users report this abuse
maybe Edge will remove "wengdongdong"!
BH

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I sent an email to Kendra

training@edgestudio.com

about this spamming the last time and she removed that person and their from the Forum permanently. It could be the same person, just regestered with a different moniker.

It took a few days to get a response though. I would urge others to do the same to get this person and their Google search list wiped from the Forum.

In the meantime, I would urge Forum participants not to click on any of the links in the comment as they might lead to malware and/or viruses to be installed on your computers.

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Very cleaver.

Took me a second listen to completely understand "lap band".

You might give just a touch more music "lead-in" before the VO. They both started at the same time, and on the first play it sounded a bit jarring. Could be a glitch with the software Edge uses for the Forum, but it was also a bit clipped at the start, like it came in in the middle of "Hi". Could also be my browser. Dunno.

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Thanks Guys.

Thanks, as well, for addressing the problem with wengdongdong (man, what a stupid handle). I'll be doing the same.

Bill, you're absolutely right about the beginning of "Lap Band" sounding a bit jarring. This will be only one of 8 or 9 short pieces edited together to create a commercial demo (the others are somewhat more serious, and I thought perhaps this would provide a bit of needed levity). My objective was make the piece as shorty as possible, while hopefully maintaining the humor. I should have explained that in my initial notes. Sorry about that. Good (and accurate) call on your part.

My best -

jim

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Sorry, I meant JAMES, you're so right about the abrupt beginning.

Jim

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Might I suggest leading in and fade in with about 1/2 second or so of music before beginning the VO. Ease into it.

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Any thoughts? Thanks - Jim

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I'm not all that familiar with the political genre demo, in that I don't know if, like commercial demo, only snippets are used or entire spots. What you have here is certainly a good mix of political spots within the genre - Party, person, issue, historical/informational.

The production value is very good. Only one thing bothers me. Some S's are kind of dull, which I'm blaming on the processing rather the delivery. The more obvious examples:

First spot:"...lifts up all Americans" (both S's) - Sounds like an over-use of a de-esser or noise gate/EQ.

Second spot: "Veterans" & "pockets"

Third spot: the first "glass" & "arsenic"

Forth spot: nearly all of them except for "voice"

I'm thinking that it may be a little over-processed because a good number of the other S's are somewhat crisper. I'd prefer a somewhat sibilant S to the somewhat dull and lispy S's. Only my 2c.

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Wow you certainly got a lot of feedback though it seems to unfortunately be mostly spam! What an odd place to hack an account and spam.

Anyway to the demo:

For the first ad at the "everyone gets a fair shot" I feel like it was a perfect slight pause leading into the line. The line before it however it felt like the pause was slightly too long. Overall I thought the tone and delivery was good.

Spot Number 2. The main thing that stuck out is you have that good somber, rugged, almost gravely voice going on which works well. I feel like perhaps there was a little too much strain being put on the words. Almost like I can see your neck veins bulge and your teeth grit sometimes. I think you were going for outrage and resentment "...went right into our pockets" but it just felt like it may have been better to take a little bit of angry strain out.

Some of the pauses in the third spot sounded slightly off (length-wise mostly).

I really liked the 4th one. My initial listen didn't pick up anything really off.

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I'd everyones opinion on this particular spot i have updated from previous discussions with a couple of members on the forums. Basically, can you please tell me you thoughts on performance (this is meant to be read with a straight face, but is tongue-in-cheek) and the production. In particular, does it sound like a Captain speaking over the cabin speakers? Also, how do you feel about the engine hum sound effect? Is it too loud? Not loud enough? Or would you rather it not be present at all? Interested to hear everyones ideas.

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Nailed it! Even got the background noise level to match what sounds like cockpit ambiance. Perfecto.

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Only thumbs up from me!

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Thanks for weighing in, TomJ. Much appreciated. I'm learning towards keeping it as it is.

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Loved it! Certainly sounded like a captain over cabin speakers.

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Thanks all, it made the final cut at the end of my demo :)

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Alright, after the last feedback I have changed things around and put a spot on the end which is really far out on left field but it was from a "sick of your airline?" type ad.

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It would be interesting to see what others may think, but IMHO this is a winner.

Only one thing you might consider changing. The "Airline" spot has a high-pitched hum under it that's a little disturbing. I think I know what you were going for (airplane jet engine noise), but you might consider processing it more like the Southwest Airline tag line "You're now free to move about the country".

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vE4xbcDQ2jQ

Experiment with bleeding or overlapping just a few mili-seconds from #2 to #3.

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I've taken a listen to the Southwest Jet tag. Trying to emulate the sound for both the speech and engine hum. Hopefully today i crack it. Thanks for all the feedback, James. Much appreciated.

EDIT: Did that hum really not sound like engine noise? It was taken from an actual recording from inside a plane cabin....

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My preference? Forget about the hum of the engine, it's just too rough on the ears and then cuts off like slamming a door. I'm not sure that it would work even if you faded out.

Just take out or minimize the lower and lower-mid frequencies and boost the upper-mid and upper ones in the EQ. No need to get real fancy. Just thin the sound out with less bass and more treble like AM radio.

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I agree with jamesromick about the engine noise. I understand the desire for authenticity, but it really distracts from an otherwise good, albeit unconventional read. Same thing regarding the transition between #2 & 3.

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This is very odd to me, when im listening on my 7506's i can hardly hear the engine hum whereas you both mention it is really distracting. It's barely noticeable to me, and this is rather worrying and have no other headphones to double check this. When played through the speakers, the sound can be heard even less....

EDIT: I just asked my wife to listen through the headphones without hearing the Airline spot before. I asked her what she thought, and specifically "Did it sound like you were in a plane?" she said "Yes, but you need to turn the engine sound UP"

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Maybe we need to find a way to spin off a separate thread on the engine noise issue! My 2¢, I didn't find the noise that distracting on my phones, although, as James suggests, you probably could just replace it with the appropriate filtering/EQ on your voice. However ... I think the joke works better if you sound more like a captain, up close and quieter in the mic, friendly enough, but also serious/matter-of-fact, low-key about the redistribution thing.
Good job.

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It sounded like the adds I hear on TV. I didn't notice the hum the is apparently there and it did sound like you were really talking over the speakers on an airplane, but I really liked that affect.

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Hi all, once again this is the new commercial demo (replacing current ones) i received back from the engineer however this is for the Australian market instead. Only a couple of spots were made up and as per feedback from James on my American demo, i've reduced the overall db to -3db as it also sounded a bit hot. Again, appreciate all comments on performance and post-production.

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Good demo! Nice mix of spot, good emotion/acting - none sound "read" to me, which is something I really watch for. The "Simplybetteroff" one went a bit long for me. Great work!

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Thanks Tom, i also thought the first spot is little too long. I'll see if i can cut some more away from it.

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So, are you a native Aussie?

Yeah, at 19 seconds, the second cut is too long for a demo. Unless, of course, it is a spot that you actually did, are proud of and is well known in Australia.

Here's a suggestion. Start the spot at "With a Money Back Mortgage..." to the end, That gives you 9 - 10 seconds and the message is complete. Now you've got room for another spot., Either add something in between #1 & #2 or move things around in a different order. Note: My ear wants to hear something that doesn't sound like a continuation of the first spot. The driving music of the One Republic spot is a good contrast and the listener won't mistake a concert promo for a domain name service. Yeah, I know it sounds like a "final spot", but it also shows good energy and contrast - then bring the tempo and the mood down with the bank commercial.

Here's a partial order to consider. Just my 2c.

My Domain
One Republic (the whole thing)
Australian Bank
VotaPhone
Outback or Hungry Jacks
Mini
Outback or Hungry Jacks
Then the cut down Mortgage spot and something to close with.

Have another question for you, When you normalized the file, did you use and/or render a mono or stereo file? I have noticed that when I add music beds to my VO mp3's, if I render them in mono the music doesn't have the "pop" that it does when rendered in stereo.

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Yeah im a native Aussie but i work in both accents because i no longer live in Australia and they really haven't come out of their shell in terms of online casting. For example, Voices.com maybe gets 1 Aussie job per week.

Ah and now i understand when reading your comment why you were saying spot "#2" is too long. #1 and #2 are actually the same spot, so it's longer than you thought!. It's a radio ad currently playing in Australia and it is 30 seconds total. Actually if you go to www.simplybetteroff.com.au - the company has inserted the radio ad on that first page with a play button sitting just above a horribly voiced video by someone.

But i will definitely change it because i agree it's too long. But i really like how i talk without music and then the music kicks in after the word "differently". So i'll see what i can do but i dont think i can get another spot created - that ship has sailed now but maybe i can break the golden rule and get away with trying to produce 1 tiny spot myself. At least it will sound different from the others :P

And i just checked and you're right, the demo came in stereo, but i've rendered it to mono after i normalized. I'll fix this, thanks for pointing that out. I may be able to post the final Aussie demo again later tonight if i get time.

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I kind of thought that was the case (that #1 &#2 were the same spot), but the introduction seemed just a little different than when the music kicked in. I thought the first part was a service called "My Domain" and the other part was the other service called"SimplyBetterOff".

The "naked" (no music bed) start is appealing because it's just you - your raw voice. Keep that up front. We get who you are right from the get-go - it's almost like a slate. That's why I suggested hitting the listener with the high energy Techno/Disco music of "One Republic". Let that one play out (with the girl's reverb at the end) and then bring it back down to earth again, nice and calm with the Bank spot. They're so different that it shows versatility right away. And you mentioned before with the other demo that your intention was to get the listener to stay to through whole demo. IMHO, the combination of those 3 in contrast up front would do that - to get the listener to see (hear) what else is in your bag of tricks. Only my 2c.

The others blend well into each other as is. The order isn't all that crucial. All you need to do is to come up with a good tag - maybe something outrageous and cleaver.

There's no reason that you shouldn't shop it around in the US, even if the specs don't call for an Aussie accent. Who knows, you might change someone's mind about going in that direction. You might even consider combining bits of the two demos for that purpose.

Kinda thought the stereo thing was an issue because the mix of the music beds sounded a little thin. I'm willing to bet that the mix sounds much richer in stereo.

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Just received my commercial demo back from the engineer. I'm basically after your thoughts on it in terms of both performance and post-production quality. Thanks.

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First play impressions:

Do you know what the final overall peak dB level of the production is? It seems a little hot. I went on Voicebank.net and played some other demos with the same volume adjustment on my headphones and the Voicebank.net demos were more comfortable to listen to. Also, IMHO, 1:25 is too long, although I have noticed that the Canadian trend is for longer demos than in the States. 60 to 70 seconds is about the average industry standard for a commercial demo.

Subsequent plays:

Turkish Aitlines - Good spot, nice music selection

Spotify - another good one

#3 - Some problems here. Seems to be two different styles. It's sophisticated copy, but there's a "fer yer lifestyle" and a "seating fer five". But then a very, very articulate "ground breaking technology. And this is just a personal preference, but there's no mention of a product. I know that it's a luxury car commercial. But which car?

PC Gaming - another good one. Is the product 'SteamLink" or EsteemLink"? Wasn't clear to my aged ears.

Evelera (sp) - nice spot

Burger King - Kind of odd copy. Why would they advertise something that costs more? Unless the next line is, "But it's worth it!" The spot just feels incomplete.

Kalua - Short & Sweet. Real nice spot. Consider moving it up in the order closer to the beginning.

#8 - The music covered up the last word so I didn't get the product/service clearly. Maga-something? Just a guess.

Plusses: Each cut sounds different, in that it doesn't sound like you did it in the same studio on the same mic in the same session. Mixes are generally good, but with those product problems mentioned above. And each cut has it's own personality - you sound like you, but not the same you with each selection.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks for the detailed review, James. You mentioned the 'Canadian trend', am I sounding Canadian in my demo? I hope not but please can you confirm that for me? Also the whole thing is sitting around -1db but i guess i can quickly jump in and normalize to -3db.

#3 - I'll see if i can re-record this.

I wasnt sure about the Burger King one either. It's actually a commercial that was made for the Cannes festival which is trying to place for an award. It's an ad to show the audience (board members) how Burger King was trying something different at their chain of restaurants to increase sales. Maybe i should remove this one...

I'll see if i can move the Kahlua one up and see how it sounds. Although i was trying to sort of set a pace where the spots got shorter and shorter so i keep the attention of the listener right till the end.

#8 The last word is Medipol. It's a university. Not sure i can fix that one here.

Peer Feedback:

No, you don't sound Canadian. I've just noticed from the demos I've listened to on VoiceBank.net from Canadian agencies that our Northern Friends seem to have longer demos than we do here in the Lower 48.

Yeah, I figured that your engineer mastered it closer to 0dB. And I'm willing to guess that it was mostly a music production facility where they do VO as a secondary service. Somewhere between -6dB and -3dB is a much more comfortable listening level for VO overall. The thing is: If an agent, casting person or client got a bunch of demos and set some time aside to listen to them at one sitting, yours would blast in their headphones and they'd be fumbling for the volume control causing them to possibly miss the first couple of spots, your money spots. They may even skip past yours and continue on to the next demo in the queue without even giving yours a listen, or delete it altogether.

Don't scrap the Burger King spot, but see if you can complete the thought. Do you have more of the actual commercial copy? Just another sentence might do. It's a nationally known product to include and it fits your voice.

The one I'd scrap (unless you're absolutely married to it) is #3. I could be totally off base here (and sometimes I am) but it just doesn't seem to fit your voice somehow. You almost sound like you're trying to force it down into a vocal register that is a little uncomfortable. What I hear you doing is a "Zoom, Zoom" Mazda sports car or SUV commercial that is more in your style of vocal quality and energy. And, without knowing how old you actually are, that would be more appealing to your 20-something/30-something sound and peers. Luxury cars are for the rich and lazy.

As far as coaxing the listener to stay to the end: IMHO, the Kalua spot is really good. But more often than not, most listeners (agents, casting people) aren't going to get past the first 10 or 15 seconds unless you hook them there. Which is why you want your best stuff up front. Yeah, move it up if you can.

Peer Feedback:

Alright, i've re-listened to the car one and can hear what you're saying. My wife completely agrees with you as well so i guess you're standing on base actually :)

I have the whole Burger King ad, as i asked the guys for the video after they finished producing it which they were happy to. I wish i could send it to you and see if you could suggest a better sentence because i cant seem to be able to.

Would you mind if i posted my Australian demo later on, James? I'd appreciate your thoughts on that as well. Maybe in a couple of hours time?

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear rharkins's recording

I am a new voice actor and I put this demo together myself using the free scripts on the Edge Studio library. I know that's a no-no, but I've made the choice to do it anyways. How do I sound? Can I get work or an agent with this demo?

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Peer Feedback:

I was going to start with "without even listening to it...no, it won't get you an agent."

Based on factors you already acknowledged, you won't. These scripts are far too well known, in many cases from commercials that have already aired with KNOWN TALENT which means the agent will know without a doubt, that you did not do that job.

The scripts library is for practice. Anyone making a demo "reel" will have to make up some unique material which cannot be found anywhere else unless it's sliced out of a job you yourself did.

Your sound is sub-par. It's too strident on 's' sounds in a few places, your space is too live and I can hear you moving or something making noise during your recording. No, that won't get you an agent.

Your delivery(s) don't vary enough in tone and timbre. You're mixing genres in a single "demo." No, that won't get you an agent.

You need to work on your delivery and refine some skills. You need to find or create a better recording space. You need to clean up your audio chain. AND a demo needs to be fully fleshed-out with full production qualities such as music and possible sound f/x where practical. You need to keep the genres separate.

I have no clue if you've been on the Edge call on Sunday nights when demos are discussed, but if you proceed in submitting this demo to talent agents, you will do possible irreparable harm to ANY chance of them EVER giving you a chance in the future. This "demo" would do FAR more damage than any good could come from it.

I know what I've said is blunt and perhaps harsh, but you seem to disregard what is commonly known for what you seem to think is better. Proceed with extreme caution.

Peer Feedback:

Mixing different genres on a single demo is not a good idea - in fact, it's just not done by "professionals", or even by those serious about becoming working voice artists. Each thing - commercials, eLearning, narration, video games, messages on hold, and on and on - is its own animal and should be on separate demos. Yes, there is a little crossover here and there, but not as drastic as you have here. And to think that you're going to "buck the trend" by showing all aspects of your talent on a single demo is impractical, to say the least.

Discounting all of that, the demo as a demo sounds home made. A dead giveaway that you're inexperienced and unprepared to compete in a very competitive field. Getting some training and coaching is the way to go. Even seasoned pros still take coaching lessons regularly.

My 2c? Don't shop this around to agents. You will only be doing any career you might have in VO a big disservice. And playing catch-up to undo the possible damage might take years, if you stick with it that long.

Save your pennies. Get some coaching. Learn what it takes to put together a quality demo that will get you representation and work. And don't do it yourself unless you have some quality gear, a great recording space, and some mad engineering skills.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you both very much for your feedback! I really appreciate that you took some time to listen to this newbie's work. I sincerely appreciate the honesty; I needed it. I will continue to work on my craft before doing anything else. Thanks!!!

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Click to hear chrissy45's recording

Hello, I am working on some demos and would like some thoughts on this short documentary piece about the Anaconda snake. Thank you. chrissy45

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Peer Feedback:

Recording quality and music sound pretty good. The read seems a little slow to me, but it all depends on what is on the screen, so it may not be.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you WJM . I'll up the pace slightly to see if that makes a difference. I think I was imagining a video of a snake slithering slowly through the jungle searching for his dinner.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Tiffany Marz's recording

Hi, I have always wanted to do Voiceovers but have never really had the money to pay for classes or a professionally recorded demo. It was suggested to me to just use my smartphone. This is what you will hear. I'd like to know if that is a bad idea, or if it is acceptable what would be your tips for doing so. Thank you!

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Peer Feedback:

As far as submitting a "demo" recorded on your smartphone? Bad Idea.

You may have heard that, if push comes to shove, recording an "audition" on your smartphone may be acceptable in certain situations - for instance, if the audition has to be to the agent, casting person or client within the next 30 minutes and you have no other choice. But the sound quality of a smartphone (unless you record in a completely dead environment, and even then it's probably iffy) is just not good enough to qualify as "professional".

If it was intended to be a "demo", this recording is a little confusing - a mixture of genres. Is it a character voice demo? Is it a commercial demo? Is it a video game demo? Each is it's own animal (genre) and should be separate demos unto themselves.

Stay away from the "too familiar". Nobody does, "I'll get you, my pretty" better than Margaret Hamilton. Why risk being compared to her?

The same thing with scripts. The "hum dinger" script is familiar as an Edge Script Library script. And these scripts are used for practice and teaching purposes. They're just too familiar in the VO industry as such. Even Edge will tell you not to use their scripts for a demo.

There's no substitute for good training and the best produced demo that you can afford. Save your pennies and do it right. Not doing so may only hurt your chances. The business is just too competitive to go into it "on the cheap".

Not familiar with the MMA agency. (At least that's what I thought I heard. It was snipped off at the end and a little unclear.)

Peer Feedback:

Savvy writing ! Apropos , if anyone is wanting a a form , my business partner discovered a template document here http://goo.gl/PI4Ekm

Peer Feedback:

I'm with James on this one. I started into VO a couple of years ago with very minimal training and got nowhere fast. It took two years, but I'm finally enrolled in the Phase 2 program with 2 demos here at Edge, and am also taking some on-camera and improv classes. Listening to my previous recordings, I'm already identifying a ton of mistakes.

For performance, I would suggest doing one script at a time instead of trying to put together a demo. It makes it easier for others to identify any patterns or ongoing issues, as well as get a better sense of your overall performance.

For recording quality, definitely ditch the smart phone. Way too much background hiss. You can get a decent mic and audio interface for about $200 (Audio Technica AT2020, and Presonus Audiobox are pretty good), or even get a USB mic for about $100. Blue makes some really good affordable ones. Harbor Freight has moving blankets that are relatively inexpensive ($7-10), that can go a long way to deaden the sound if you're not ready to invest in acoustic foam yet. I went as far as to buy a grommet kit and some cup hooks to hang some in my podcast studio. Just 2 blankets made a world of difference.

Hope this helps, and good luck in your VO adventures!

Peer Feedback:

I agree that you do need a professional demo or at least on some decent equipment at home. Like your character voices though and there is nothing better than going to some classes -- there;s always something new to learn.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear VoiceoverMike's recording

Would welcome any feedback you have to offer including performance, quality and sequence. Thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

Recording quality is pretty good. Nice mix with the music.

A few thoughts:

#1 - Good spot - just a couple of things here. Good on you for using another voice for the kid. You dipped a bit in volume at the beginning of "...and the time to start saving for your child's education is NOW." (That's the message, right?) Not to necessarily HIT "now", but give it a little more weight - as opposed to "later" - and lift the inflection just a touch, like there's more to the story - this isn't the end of the message. In the next part you're going to tell me how. In fact, you might just continue on with more copy and lop it off for the final cut.

#2 - Not sure about this one. It's too long, your delivery isn't that much different than the previous spot and, to be honest, it really isn't all that amusing. Think about canning it. Only my 2c.

#3 - Another good one. Just one thing - complete the "-ed" at the end of "noticed". it's a bit of a tongue twister, but you need to at least "tap" the D, otherwise it sounds like you rushed through it.

#4 - Another nice spot. It is good that it's "in the clear" (no music bed), but there is a little room echo and a slight breath noise after "barbeque." Would you consider some ominous music (like the Dragnet "duuum, de, dum, dum" or the shrieking "Psycho" violins or something) just before, after or under "ant mounds"? That would be funny and put a "button" on the clip.

#5 - Another nice spot. Really warm, friendly and down home. There's a really good personal connection here. Right in your wheelhouse. IMHO, the best cut on the demo. Consider moving it up to #1 or #2.

So, trash #2 and you'll have enough room for at least 2 more spots. You might consider a Husband-Wife thing to show dialogue interaction (just be sure that She doesn't show you up). And maybe a short one-liner tag.

Peer Feedback:

James, thanks so much for taking the time to listen and provide this valuable feedback. I will be incorporating many of your observations in my next update. I appreciate that you did such a thorough and insightful review.

Peer Feedback:

Love your sound , Mike !! If you're not getting paid to speak currently (which I wouldn't doubt) it's only a matter of time. Love it.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear aceofkates's recording

Thoughts? Just trying out some commercial material. Aside form the performance which I am curious about - I know the music volumes vary, but the file got corrupted before it could be edited more. Do you think that stands out a lot?

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Professional Feedback:

Hi "aceofkate" (cute)

Thank you for choosing me to do your checkup. I will be completely honest ... this is clearly a homemade attempt at a demo and it should not be sent out as it will not be taken seriously. The performances are weak and not believable. It sounds as though you haven't had training and that you are merely reading and playing with the words rather than communicating. I really didn't want to listen to the entire thing but forced myself to do so.

All of that being said, there are some glimmers of hope. With proper training and a clear understanding of what voiceover is all about you can certainly do this. You are not afraid to express yourself emotionally and you have a nice tonality to your voice. You just need training. Also, you should NEVER make your own demo. certainly not without a lot of input from experienced VO talent, producers and coaches.

I'm sure this is disappointing in many ways, but it is important to me that I provide you with honest feedback. If I can help you moving forward, please let the folks at Edge know. I would be happy to help you achieve your VO goals.

Have a GREAT day.

Dan Friedman

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach April 28, 2016 at 2:06PM

Peer Feedback:

Good voice and choices for sound, equipment sounds pretty good. The bright and cheery may be a little over the top especially on the first spot - always frontload the more flawless spot you have or the biggest client IF they are the real deal. 70% won't be listing past spots 1-2 even if they like you - it's a snap judgement first impression industry.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much Dan and VoiceoverMike. I really appreciate the feedback. I'll definitely be making the improvements.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear jclewis1's recording

This would be targeted to the producers of documentaries -- Nat Geo and Discovery Channel.

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Peer Feedback:

There are some (for lack of a better word) less elocutionary words in here.

Here's what my aged ears heard:

"This is duh face of evil. His name is synonymous with depravity. Duhnight, Anna Foster's killer comes out of the shadows. The father huhkuhbe so loving, and so vicious."

There are also quite a bit of mouth and nasal clicks.

Recording quality is pretty good.

Peer Feedback:

You have a nice tone to your voice but felt you were just reading the words. Sounded flat. Give it another shot and see what you can come up with.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Jerikokai's recording

My very first demo. Its my first and therefore a bit shaky but let me know how it sounds to you.

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Peer Feedback:

103 plays and no feedback? Hmmmm.

Question: Was this done in a professional studio? Kind of sounds like it, but there is a little "home grown" aspect to it. If it was done in a studio, do they regularly produce VO, or mostly music? There's a difference. (I guess that's actually 2 questions.)

This kind of sounds like a concept piece. And what I mean is that the middle 3 spots are "sandwiched" into another spot (same music, same message). Interesting, but we've already been there. When I hear that music again, it makes me wonder if I started over or if it was the same spot again.

The pro: The clips and text are nice and original.

The con: It's not long enough. A typical demo is 60 - 75 seconds.

Things to clean up: Your hard K and X sounds sound wet - there's a little spittle on the back of your tongue that pops in the recording. Examples: "faX machine" - This Could be" - "rest and relaXation". Watch "giddeen" for "getting".

Peer Feedback:

Thanks James! I really appreciate your feedback!

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear psjones's recording

Potential section of an Educational/Training/Explainer Demo

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Peer Feedback:

Sounds good. I hear a little regional northeastern-ness... particularly on: "...deliv-uhs some news..."

- touzet -

Peer Feedback:

Touzet ya caught me on the regionalism. Still working on that, constant battle.
"Howeva" this is for a "Northeast" recruiting company. Nevertheless I should read it neutral, unless asked to use a specific regional accent. Thanks.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear terri-nicole's recording

I've revised this demo based on comments I received; I eliminated 2 spots as suggested, played around with the order and took off the slate (for time's sake mainly). I also put in a new audition that was taped in a professional studio at the beginning and altered the GPS cycling computer to fit the music. I've been so close to this for so many hours, I can't tell what's good anymore. Please help. And also tell me if the transitions between pieces are too choppy. THANKS!

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Peer Feedback:

recording quality excellent and I liked the changes between each spot. The only criticism I would have would be that at times the music was too loud, but otherwise, well done !!

Peer Feedback:

First impressions:

Generally, the S's are too dull through out - not so with the previous recording. Don't know how much problem you might have with sibilants, but this went too far to the other extreme. The S's need to ring a little, but not be so sharp that it hurts to listen to them.

My preference would to lead with the Kohls spot. It shows all of your personality right off the bat.

IMHO, the McDonlads spot sounds like two different spots. Made me wonder why there were 2 biscuit spots in a row. Might have been the abrupt change in the music bed. Maybe if it that overlapped a bit (blended one to the other), it would tie it together. Dunno. Just my 2c.

Same kind of thing happens with the Clyclo505 spot. I much preferred the other version and cut it after "Magellan". It gets to the point - mentions the manufacturer, the product name, and what it does (in reverse order). Nice and compact. Again, only my 2c.

Is there a little more to the cosmetic spot? Do you mention a product name after "fight back"? Like "with CLINIQUE Repairwear" or something? It would only add a second or two (if that) and you'd have an identifiable product - even if it's made up. After all, the snippets should sound like actual commercials for something.

Consider this order:

Kohls - cosmetic spot (with a product name) - Magellan (previous version cut after Megellan) - Breast Cancer - McDonalds (with a blended music transition) - Submarine/Tree Frog - HGTV.

It alternates up-down-up-down-up in tone and energy - and the different styles and qualities of the delivery are a good contrast. Fiddle with sharpening up the EQ'd S's to make them pop, but not sharp and piercing.

My 2c on the music beds. I don't think that they're swallowing the VO. After all, it has to be a complete package - you're not the star but a supporting character to whole.

Also, since you admitted that you're a little "brain dead" from working on it for hours and hours, I would suggest stepping away from it for a day or two to get a fresh perspective.

Peer Feedback:

Completely agree with Jim about the "s" sounds. They've been softened too much to the point it sounds lispy. That could definitely cost you.

His breakdown of the different spots is pretty much in how I hear them, but to me, I'm hearing some commercial, some PSA, and a promo spot. Mixing genres on a single demo? TV promos should be their own demo for sure. The PSA could stay if you were to say "it's still a commercial"...it IS...but...

James gives good advice and apparently has more time to type than I do. Good luck. Look at this again after a couple of days and come back at those "s" tones.

Peer Feedback:

This is really thorough. Thank you both jamesromick and TxTom for your time and thoughtfulness. I'

"Fiddle with sharpening up the EQ'd S's to make them pop, but not sharp and piercing."

That's a little above my skill set right now but I might be able to find someone who can, possibly at the studio who produced my original demo..

I'm also in the process of investing in new software and a new computer, I would love any suggestions you can offer, without overextending my stay on this forum - Wait too late? ;-) Should I go with Adobe Audition? Sound Forge? Pro Tools? Are there advantages to purchasing a MAC vs PC for this kind of stuff. Once I decide on a software program, I can start training on how to use them to build my skill set.

For now, I'll try the order you suggest jr, and go with the original cut of Magellan. Thanks again for all your helps, folks!

Peer Feedback:

TxTom will probably suggest that MAC is the way to go. I've always worked on a PC, but I would tend to agree with him. I would go MAC if I had it to do over again. But I've invested too much in time and money to change platforms (or have dual platforms) at the moment. And he has his own preference as to his DAW - none of which you've mentioned. If you go MAC, George Whittam (Edge's technical guy and studio guru to the VO stars) is a big proponent of Twisted Wave. As far as I know, it's MAC only right now and built primarily for VO production. Here's a link:

https://twistedwave.com/

Pro Tools, IMHO, is overkill. It is very expensive and the learning curve is really steep. Audition and Sound Forge are good programs, but have the same problems - steep learning curve and expensive. Audacity is free and easier to learn, but has a certain limited capability - the biggest one, IMHO, being destructive editing (once you cut something out, it's gone - unless you hit undo before going to another editing step. That's why it is suggested to work on a copy of the recorded file so that you have the original to cut and paste from).

I am a big devotee of REAPER - available on both MAC and PC. Here's a link:

http://www.reaper.fm/download.php

It is totally customizable in look (its GUI) and performance, so even though it is a multi-track music DAW, you can streamline it for VO production. You can download it and play with a non-crippled (fully functional) version for 60 days before purchasing a license, which is only $60 for non-professional studio (personal) use. It also has tons of processing FX plugins that automatically come with the program. It is updated regularly and your license is good for for two stages of updates. For instance, it is at v5.18 right now. If you purchase a license now, you're good for updates up until v7.18, which could take years. There are tons of instructional videos on the website and on YouTube - many specific to VO. And the PDF manual is over 400 pages - much more information than you'll ever use because it is geared toward music production and MIDI, but a good thing to have to reference. REAPER does have some quirks and downsides, but for $60 it's a very powerful DAW. If you go with it, I have tons of tweaks that I can suggest to make your work flow go much easier.

Peer Feedback:

I am very new to VO and not at a level to critique, but, WOW! That sounded very professional. The music at times was a little loud and took away from your sound.
Beautiful voice! Clear, precise and high energy. Excellent!

Peer Feedback:

I'm new to this so I don't have much to say but it was very pleasant on the ears personally and i enjoyed listening to your voice.

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James again saved me a whole lot of typing for answering FOR me...he's right, I'd suggest Mac personally. Apple has approached sound in the past and created the AudioUnits plug-in format which supports every single DAW written for the Mac. And some awesome AU plugs come with every Mac. The differences between PC and Mac are not as drastic as in the past, but since I've been on Mac since the early 90's (Windows 3.1 days) the workflow on the Mac has always been more intuitive for more people. PCs were kinda viewed as "business machines" and Macs as "creative playgrounds". MANY VOs get by on PCs and you can get into a workable PC for VO for about half the money of a Mac. But for me, the price difference is worth it as Apple makes better machines (they tend to last longer...I was using a 10yo Mac in my office until recently).

James is also right about the "big dog DAWs" being complete overkill for the humble VO. Unless you're going to be producing music AND the VO, ProTools et al are like trying to kill a fly with a cannon. TwistedWave is popular on the Mac and excellent for VO work. I use Amadeus most of the time and it's very similar to TW. I've just used it far longer ...and before I ever tried VO work. I'm just used to it. I HAVE Audition and will fire it up from time to time...but even though it's a lot cleaner/simpler than ProTools/Logic/Nuendo/etc, it's still a lot more than I actually use. I like the simplest setup that gets the job done.

Reaper is something I pointed out to James when he was getting into VO and it's fit him like a glove. And ACX uses it at home base. It's a very capable DAW and extremely affordable for the individual.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you my talented and kind peers. And thank you for giving me a good excuse to get a MAC (cause that's what I've been wanting anyway because my hunch was that it was just a bit more used in this industry and therefore, had more software and resources and it might be easier to collaborate, etc)

There's a lot to digest and I'm happy to have my work cut out for me. I'm going to call my Sweetwater guy and see how I can upgrade some components. I've dropped my Scarlet Focusrite i212 one too many times and think that's why I'm having all kinds of issues when I record from home. If I get Reaper for $60, that is definitely a possibility.

It looks like this review queen will be checking out Reaper, Twisted Wave and Amadeus. Wonderful, wonderful information guys.

Also, I appreciate the compliments as well, they are just as important since there is no one in my little closet giving me feedback and my family and friends have to be sick of hearing the same spots a million times and hearing me say, "How does that sound now? Did you notice how I changed that?" Blank stare, because they didn't!

Muchas gracias!

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I'll put in a plug for it once again. Remember that you can play with a fully functional REAPER for 60 days before plunking down the $60. But it is important to work with whatever DAW you're comfortable using. One of the other big plussses of REAPER is that you don't have to keep choosing "tools" (like scissors to cut/slice a wave form or a pointer/hand tool to move it around), you just hover over the wave form and the tool changes automatically. In Audacity, you have to go to the tool bar and select those things each time you want to perform a different function. That's a PITA, if you ask me.

Anyway, asking friends isn't always the best idea. More often than not, they'll tell you what they think you want to hear - unless you absolutely trust them to be objectively critical without being fearful of hurting your feelings. That's just the nature of good friends who want to stay good friends. Take it all (even from us here on the Forum) with a grain of salt. Self-direction, self-analysis and being objectively self-critical (without being obsessive-compulsive) are among the hardest to do. On some points, rightly or wrongly, you'll just have to trust your own judgement - and the guidance of someone with VO skills whom you trust.

Peer Feedback:

There may be some over-aggressive de-essing at work here - beating up a bit too much on those S's.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear terri-nicole's recording

This is my first demo. is it up to industry snuff? Did I choose the right pieces? Hows the quality. I put the tag on myself after the studio gave me the finished mp3, does it go well with the rest of it? Open to any and all input. Thank you!

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Peer Feedback:

I thought your vocal production was excellent.
The "body at rest" piece didn't seem to fit with the others, and not sure about putting the promo tag on a commercial demo.
I thought the overall quality was excellent as well.
Personal tag at the beginning was fine.

Peer Feedback:

Sound quality and production are good. There is kind of a mix of genres though - it's mostly commercial, but there also seems to be eLearning ("choose one of the following) and a comic monologue ("A body at rest"). Not sure they belong on a commercial demo. Promos and PSA's are kind of crossovers, so they kind of work.

Lot of mouth noise on your slate. Others may disagree, but I'm not big on slating on a demo. Just my opinion.

I suggest keeping cuts 1, 2 (consider cutting it after "Magellan" - we get it, the rest is redundant), 3, 4, 6 & 8. And think about re-arranging the order a bit.

Consider cutting 5 (different genre and too much mouth noise anyway) & 7 (Not sure of the genre, it's too long and we're not sure where it's going - no product/service associated with it. It is a nice character though.).

Only my 2c. I'd be interested in what others think.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for your feedback. I agree with you, Darmaggi, about the Body of Rest piece not fitting. I let my coach and the sound engineer leave it in, but I never liked it. JamesRomick, think I will play around with order and content. Now that I have a couple of paid gigs, I will try replacing the Body at Rest and the e-learning piece if possible.

I also need to learn how to listen for "mouth noises" and how to edit them out.

You guys' feedback is really helping me move forward. I don't know if we can repost a revised piece, but if it's OK, I will.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Jackalope's recording

My first demo. Just now starting to audition and get my own studio up. This was recorded this back in October in a guys home studio that he was trying to promote for professional production. I was abroad for a few months and just now getting into auditions to try and acquire some VO work. As I was told when I recorded this one - I'm already thinking I need a new one. Looking forward to your thoughts. Don't hold back! Thanks, Tracy

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Peer Feedback:

First impressions:

The performances are fine, but there is something about the mix with the music beds that is off - the voice is "too present" and the music doesn't seem to blend well. For instance: The music for the first spot is appropriate, but it sounds "thin" like the file has been degraded somehow or lifted from a less than quality source - kind of like you're in a different room miles a way from the orchestra.

The "Soundtouch System" and the "Skydiving" spots have a much better mix. "SpaceX" is close - a little F-fart on "400".

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Inobe's recording

New to VO, trying to find my genre. Please give feed back. Thanks everyone. Inobe

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Peer Feedback:

What a soft, kind voice. Made me feel loved. Seemed a little fast, (takes a fast reader to notice a fast read, lol) Sounded good through my headphones. The background music took me away from the read though.
Matt

Peer Feedback:

Is this intended as a demo? The reason I ask is that the first spot is very well known to come from the Edge Script Library. Which means that it's well known in the industry as a practice script. Which are also used in teaching and coaching situations. Which indicates that the copy is not original to your presentation. Best to not use Edge Library practice scripts on a demo. Edge will even advise not to do so.

That said: There is a certain discernible regionalism (an urban-ness perhaps?) to your speech - very apparent on the phrase, "never been more stylish" which almost sounded like "nevah bin moah stahlish". Not necessarily a negative, but it might be somewhat limiting as to what you will be considered for, especially if it's for an upscale product like a hybrid. Not making a judgement, it's just a prejudice of the business.

3 of the 5 spots are complete (or near complete) commercials, too long for a demo. If they were cut down to snippets, you'd probably have more room for an extra spot or two to show more range. Consider having one "in the clear" with just voice and no music bed.

Peer Feedback:

Hi, Very captivating voice! Friendly, emotion filled and honest You have good control of your accents and dialects. The background music sounded right for the parts but perhaps a little to loud for me. Your pace is a bit fast. You must have a good microphone and room, it serves your voice well. You are certainly on your way as far as I can tell. Good going!

Peer Feedback:

Thanks everyone for your comments. I will work on slowing down and adjusting the music.

Hello James. It's just a practice demo. If we can't use the practice scripts here can you please share a link or more information for usable scrpts for demos? I will work on my diction for sure thanks for your honesty.

I'm getting a feel for VO and practicing to see if it's for me. I really like it and will continue to practice and perfect it.

Again, thanks for taking time out of your day to listen, I appreciate it.

Thanks.

Inobe

Peer Feedback:

Look in magazine print ads for copy. You may have to re-write it because it's meant to be read rather than spoken. Even billboards. Cereal boxes and other food containers. Household product containers. Feminine hygiene products. Medications.

Some people are proficient enough at copy writing, that they create their own, or hire someone to write it for them. There is a formula to commercial copy.

Watch commercials, record them (DVR or whatnot) and transcribe the copy. You could alter it somewhat - change the product name, use a different tag line, a different slogan or whatnot. But don't use copy that is identifiable to a personality - say, Julia Roberts doing a cosmetic commercial or Tina Fey for Amex or something. Whoever listens to your demo will know that you didn't actually do the spot. And, in the end, that's the point. A demo is a demo, but the spots have to sound like you've actually done them for broadcast.

Go for different types and styles. The ones that you did are good, style wise, but the vocal and interpretation was pretty much the same - nice, mellow, middle-of-the-road.

Create a list of adjectives for yourself - like Perky, Sexy, Sultry, Excited, Serious, Dower, Motherly, Bitchy, Sarcastic, etc.. Then devise the copy to fit the characteristics that most suite you. Sometimes a piece of copy will incorporate more than one of those attitudes at the same time.

Go to VoiceBank.net and listen to other women's demos. It can be very enlightening.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much James. Great ideas!!!! I'm going to visit the website and keep listening to VO's to learn more. I will look around the house for some script ideas too. I appreciate your feedback and answer to my question. Have a great one!!!!

Peer Feedback:

Warm and friendly, perhaps a bit soft - would have liked to hear some more upbeat or playful type of reads mixed in. The music selection in spot 1 seemed unusual to me and I think may have been distracting from the read a bit.Overall lovely voice, just more variation would have helped make it stronger.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear seanpdecker's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Excellent work! I think your interpretation and vocal performance were right on for each genre. You displayed energy and professionalism. The recording quality was great! I can't think of any critiques for you. You sound like someone who would be on radio or tv.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear psjones's recording

Potential section of a commercial demo.

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Peer Feedback:

You're working the copy too hard - you're overselling. Tone it down a bit and warm it up.

Dunno if the music fits the spot. The minor key (sad) with a positive message (up) seem at odds with each other. If the music were different (up and energetic), then you might "go for it" with more energy, contrary to the previous statement. After all, iron supplements are supposed to battle anemia and give you more energy to your blood. Maybe it was the music that threw it off.

If you're using this as a snippet for a demo, cut the tag line. It makes the selection too long for a demo and it's redundant. You've already covered it in the previous bit of copy.

Peer Feedback:

I agree with James, the music is a REALLY bad choice here. I expected some kind of oriental mystical remedy, not an iron supplement.

I don't agree it was all that oversold however. Like to hear a little more power in the tone, it gets a little wimpy in spots. This is IRON.

Peer Feedback:

Gotcha, was a little to quick on music choice. Just kinda did this in one take as a spur of the moment recording. Need to put more thought into it. Thanks.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Bullwinkle's recording

This is an edit of the last demo I uploaded. Thoughts?

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Peer Feedback:

Really nice. Works for me. One criticism I might have is that three the clips might be too long.

#1 - It's great. Good for the lead.
#2 - Consider cutting it at "How's that workin' out for ya?" (Let the audience fill in the rest.)
#3 - Consider cutting it at "What's the worst that can happen?" (Same as above, leave the stinky diapers up to the listener's imagination.) Or at "Better not answer that." (Maybe a "phew" sound?)
#4 - Consider cutting the script down to something like this: "A rain drenched morning awaits your first step outside. You lift your first cup of the day, you catch the rich scent. As you take the first sip, you realize everything is going to be ok." (if you put the attitudes in your voice - the heavy shoulders and the smile - it doesn't need to be stated. And, for my money, the smile would come after taking that first satisfying sip.)

You might have enough time to squeeze in a short tag/slogan or something. Maybe two.

Remember that commercial copy is an economy of words to get the message across quickly an succinctly.

The other criticism is a nit picky one. Think about bleeding one spot into another. If you listen to some of them on Voicebank.net, you'll notice there there isn't a mili-second of dead air.

Good stuff.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for your help. Great tips all around.

I actually did have a little bleeding between the clips, but it's only over a subtle bit of music. I'll tweak that.

Really, I'll take all of these suggestions to heart.

Professional Feedback:

Great first round and solid demo spot choices Chad.
Some thoughts, however, on your selections chosen, and track order.

Track #1 - wake up call / great intro choice
Track #2 - shorten length of spot to end at ...'how's that workin out for ya
Track #3 - hmmm...same thing about length of spot as with Track #2, I'd also shorten this spot to end at 'What's the worst that can happen?' as for voice style, it sounds a bit 'affected' in your portrayal of this character. I'd change your voice and re-record to sound a bit more conversational, as it sounds slightly to the left of 'acting' .
Track #4 - consider replacing with another spot as this sounds too much like first track and becomes a coffee 'theme' and you want variety on your demo/ especially with commercial copy.
Track #5 !! I'd add another short spot or tag at end.

In addition, blend / or bleed the tracks together and that will also allow some additional time for another short spot...say a 'first home buyer's moment - or wedding day' or some pivotal life-event moment genre.dd

Definitely bleed tracks together for better transitional sound and then you can include another spot - a short one that had a 'tag' feel to it.

Hope this helps!

Best,
Marjorie Kouns

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach March 16, 2016 at 3:18AM

Peer Feedback:

Well, you bring up some things I worried about, Marjorie, so I'll give it another round in the brain burner. Thank you for your help, too.

Peer Feedback:

If either of you still sees this, can I ask where in the lineup the TAGS might go? I was assuming peppered throughout, but now I'm not so sure.

Peer Feedback:

I wouldn't recommend running tags together, perhaps 2 somewhere as bumpers - I would also consider replacing the character spot with something outside the box of where you were so far. I agree with front loading the first spot as I think that's probably your wheelhouse. What I have heard is: Best spot first, something very contrasting but solid next and then fill in from there. If a decision maker is sill listening after 2 they have already probably decided you are worth a shot unless you convince them otherwise in 3-5 or whatever. IMHO if you want to go with a character do a separate reel. Overall sounds good, especially spot 1.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Bullwinkle's recording

I am putting together a collection of self created and professional clips, and I'm wondering how it comes together. Thoughts are appreciated.

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Peer Feedback:

Are these intended to be separate clips for your website? Because, IMHO, putting together into a pseudo-demo may be a bit confusing as the deal with a couple of different genres. Most sound like commercials, but the e-learning thing sticks out like a sore thumb. You might take the commercial ones and snip them up into a demo, but also post the entire clip(s) as a separate example(s) or your work.

All of them are really good though and sound professionally produced.

Peer Feedback:

It's meant to be a demo reel. Sorry, that was in the heading, but I should have clarified.

Peer Feedback:

Think about eliminating the eLearning spot (it doesn't really belong on a commercial demo) and take the best 7 - 15 second snippets of the others to splice into a 60 - 70 second demo. Demos rarely, if ever, contain a fully fleshed out 30 second spot.

BUT - You could place them as singl, separate examples on your website.

Peer Feedback:

I knew it was too long (and the training bit was on the chopping block, so I'm glad to hear my instinct was right there).

Taking that out will bring it down to just over a minute. I'll shave a few seconds off somewhere else, too.

Thanks for your help.

If anyone else has comments, I'd love to hear them.

Peer Feedback:

You make an excellent point.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear psjones's recording

Possible section of an e-learning demo. Please check my sound quality as usual. I am still experimenting with room noise reduction and editing chain. Thanks ahead of time.

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Peer Feedback:

There's still some echo-y-ness to the recording - mostly at the beginning but less and less noticeanble through to the end. Don't know what to suggest as a cure.

Listening through headphones, there are some noticable edits or gating out of breaths, maybe with a de-breather. The bottom line is that the words just before don't sound finished off.

I don't remember what software you are using, but here's a trick I have learned is more effective than not with REAPER that should work with yours as well. When I slice the waveform before a breath or errant mouth noise (a click or lip smack for instance), I will stretch the wavefore out as far as I can to that slice point and then taper the sound down with a fade into room tone. That way, I can usually get that little breathiness of the end of a word so it sounds more complete rather than clipped off and almost robotic. So take a word like "insead". It doesn't really end with the D, but with the breathiess of the "uh" that follows the hard consonant sound - insead(uh). It's very slight, but it's there. That's what I miss hearing in this recording (even without the breaths).

Overall, the delivery is pretty good. Maybe just a touch less professorial and more layman using big words kind of guy.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks James, excellent advice as usual I'll give it a try.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear bootstep17's recording

I recorded at home with my bose headset. So forgive the microphone quality. I still looking for other material for animation as this is an animation demo. Any feedback is appreciated.

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Peer Feedback:

Pretty good voices except the lion king. Cut that one. It was a good try.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear coolkayman@aol.com's recording

My main question is about the recording quality - Editing, transitions, sound levels etc, But all feedback is appreciated.

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Peer Feedback:

Your pacing was good with great inflection, however I think the music is a bit too loud.

Peer Feedback:

Can't understand what your saying in a couple of segments. The vocal needs to be eq'd, there are some artifacts as well coming through in the processing. The vocal also doesn't sit well in the mix. The transitions are choppy and need to flow better stitching the segments together better.

Peer Feedback:

Agree that the mix is a bit off. Your recording space sounds a little echo-y making the vocal a little muddy. EQing may help sharpen the overall sound and make the vocal "pop" a bit more. but it's better to start at the source (your recording space) an soundproof/deaden it some more.

Be wary not to self produce your own demo. You may wind up doing more damage to a potential VO career than not. With all of the competition out there, a sub par demo will scream "amateur" to a potential agent, casting person and/or client.

Peer Feedback:

I like what I heard but it had the feel of the same or really too close tempo/pave throughout. I would look for copy that fits you that can be delivered in ways that are at least 3 distinct different ways.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear EvieSchiff's recording

Evie is 7 and thinking about pursuing voice over work. We are trying out a new mic and would love feedback on her performance.

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Peer Feedback:

Evie,

Good Job! Only 7? Remember Evie like you are talking to a friend or a little brother.... Don't read it to me , talk it to me, Keep it up!

Peer Feedback:

Great job from the youngin! Work on tongue twisters and pronunciation. That is a key to booking jobs, even at that age. Good energy, and sounded like Evie had fun, try to keep it that way, so it doesn't become boring. Tons of work in animation and kids tv right now.

Peer Feedback:

That is awesome! I wish my teen boys had that much character in what they attempt from time to time. The peanut butter spot was probably too quick but then followed up nicely with a great paced delivery right afterward. When she controls the nerves (guess on my part for the speed) she sounds great and she did control them most of the time. Well done!

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Kate Fishman's recording

Here are two reads I hoped would become a studio sample demo. Working with David Goldberg, I repositioned my mic, added an Apple eq and its multi-band compressor & all seemed fine until I had to update my operating system. Now the sound isn't quite right again. So I think my problem is tweaking the eq & the compressor. So any suggestions on how to fix the distortion? As usual I always welcome comments on the read, but my main problem is the sound.

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Peer Feedback:

Yep, I think you still have some technical issues to work out. I'm hearing some distortion on some of the sections where you place emphasis.

I think you picked a very difficult script to read!

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Boatcrew22's recording

Profile is going up on WarriorVoices.org. Want to be the best I can be so any feedback is much appreciated.

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Peer Feedback:

The recording quality sounded good to my as yet untrained ears. I liked the vocal performance, and how the different voices were used to make a point.

Peer Feedback:

The "buddy to buddy" section really seemed like it was one boring guy talking to a more boring guy. It just lacks any kind of authenticity IMO. It also sounds self-produced. So if you're going for a demo, this could do more damage than good.

Peer Feedback:

Maybe throw in an accent or something to flare it up it was too boring for me...Some times boring is ok but in this case you didn't at all sound like you cared about what you were talking about but the other guy did....Don't be afraid to feed off the other performer partner reads are great for that...

Peer Feedback:

The announcer part sounded the best, but I would speed that up a little. Also, if the intent is demo it needs to have more than 1 thing, otherwise it is a sample read which have a different purpose.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear psjones's recording

Possible section of an Educational/Training Demo.

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Peer Feedback:

There is some room reverberation in the background. Hope that helps.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks mwjrnc, every bit of feedback is valuable.

Peer Feedback:

Hearing some regionalism in the read.

Peer Feedback:

On recording quality: Sounds as though the track was processed with noise gating. True or not, the end of each phrase sounds clipped and then there's an unnatural silence between that's especially noticeable against the room's reverberation during the actual read.

On performance: The first time the word "our" is used, it's stretched into a dipthong, making it more like "hour". Later, a couple of words have their "R" sounds softened to instead sound more like "ah" (pahtner, too fah. This is what I guess TxTom meant by saying he hears some regionalism. Overall, if I were directing this, I'd ask for a bit more natural read and not so much heavy punching of words.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear dwwst12's recording

I'm a 17-year veteran of the radio news business, but brand new to freelance voice acting work. This is my first demo after doing some training with a coach. Honest feedback is greatly appreciated!

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Peer Feedback:

Very nice voice and technique is very good. But IMHO, this sounds like a promo demo more than a commercial demo...and the reason I say that is that the fx and b/g music all sound like they're from promos instead of a variety of commercials. Almost like you accessed the sound library at your radio station to produce this. I would have like to hear maybe two more samples and the existing ones be just a bit shorter.

Peer Feedback:

The radio background is very evident. Beneficial in that you're really comfortable behind the mic. But not so much so in the area of "Voice Acting". Yours is a pleasant, and articulate voice, but kind of generic radio announcer sounding in delivery.

As far as this demo is concerned. All of the voice processing sounds the same, like it was recorded in the same studio on the same mic with the same FX stack all in the same session. The spots kind of bleed into one another, in that the pacing, intensity, relative dynamic pitch range, relative volume and speech patterns are nearly all the same - to the point that it all sounds like one spot with different music interspersed here and there. There's no "fast-slow" contrast, no "high energy excitement - mellow, warm and fuzzy guy next door" contrast, no "ups and downs - highs and lows" emotional tug. Kind of "talked at" rather than "talked to".

If you talk to or listen to the stories of any really successful voice actors that has come from a strictly radio background, you'll hear the commonality in their stories of how strange and difficult it was for them to transition into the "acting" of voice over from the "broadcast" style of delivery. You're not alone.

Peer Feedback:

dwwst12 -
I see what TxTom is getting at, except I would say that these are commercial radio spots without visuals - higher energy, attention grabbing, etc.
I think you sound really relaxed and confident at the mic, and project your voice but I wouldn't categorize it as "announcery" per se.

the demo sounds great, in my opinion. I'd guess you paid a pretty penny for it. (or if you did it yourself, you're a skilled audio engineer)
The only criticism I would offer is that the spots strike me as being of one "note". The voice sounded very much the same from one spot to the next.

(BTW, where did you get your scripts?)

having said that, this sounds competitive to me.

cheers,
DS.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you guys very much for your input. I am driven to succeed at this and will continue to work to improve. I do hear enough TV ads with *a bit* of an announcer feel -- sort of a "guy next door/announcer hybrid" -- that I hope I can find a lane for myself initially. There's certainly no shortage of different types of work out there, even if there are so many people competing for it.

Dave, to answer your question, the demo was produced by the coach who gave me instruction over the last several months. He provided the scripts. I can see what you mean regarding the "one note" issue, but hopefully it gives people a feel for what I can do reasonably well, and I'll update the demo when I get more finished jobs under my belt.

Peer Feedback:

so I saw an interview with Jodi Gottlieb (creative director who hires voice talent) in which she noted that starting in 2015, commercial scripts are "warming up" a bit....that the pendulum is swinging in the other direction now away from the deadpan, dry "conversational", back to something that is a little more engaging.

I've been attenuating my criticism of the "announcer" sound lately. let it flow. let it be entertaining.

-DS

Peer Feedback:

I liked it - very professional, comfortable sound. I don't think it lacked personality and was very well produced if not slightly heavy on the sfx but music was spot on leveled well and transitions were clean. I would hire you except you wouldn't like the pay....well I take that back your in radio right? :)

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear SincerelyAmanda's recording

This is a glimpse from my variety of voice over work, from news anchor style to historical interpretation.

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Peer Feedback:

Amanda --
I like your performances. you put a lot of effort into articulating each bit. You seem to really care about the way you speak each word. Each demo bit deserves some feedback (and you'll probably get some).
My major bugaboo is the low quality of the recording. It's like listening through the telephone.

cheers,
DS.

Peer Feedback:

I'm with Dave on this.The sound quality leaves something to be desired.

The articulation is really good, but what's the rush? The Kennedy thing flew by so fast that there was barely time to process it. The second cut was rather fast paced as well. I'm loosing content for the speed. The last two were better paced IMHO.

Is this intended to be a demo?

Peer Feedback:

Excelente calidad vocal, lo que queda por mejorar es la calidad del audio.
Pero su técnica es muy buena.
Saludos

Peer Feedback:

It's a bit too fast in the first half. The switching to different voices sounds good. I hear some ssss (mostly in the first half).

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for the feedback, folks! This demo is a shortened version of a longer demo compilation of excerpts from a radio show for which I'm a correspondent and co-host (www.HistoryAuthor.com), with work for a non-profit somewhere in the middle.

Yeah, I noticed afterward that the Kennedy part does sound rushed, especially since it's picking up in the middle before the listener has a chance to get acclimated to the rhythm. Slowing down is something I consciously have to practice.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear sam22arc's recording

Narration Demo

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Peer Feedback:

VO sound quality is very good - with the exception of some popping plosives here and there - mostly P's and some B's, T's, TH's and W's .

I take it that this is self-produced. Dead giveaway is that all the VO sounds like it was done on the same mic in the same space with the same FX processing and volume levels. The mixes with the music beds are a little out of balance - the voice is too present. And there is little change in the intensity, energy level, rhythm (pace) of delivery and relative vocal pitch range from spot to spot.

You have a kind of dental S sound or a thick tongue S sound sometimes- not lispy, but not sharp. Something to work on.

There are also some regionalisms creeping in. Example: The word "oil" (oye'l) was almost "all" or "oole" - missing the diphthong. The word "water" was almost "wudder". Watch "git" for "get"

The Jamaica spot almost sounds like a commercial rather than narration. And the last cut sounds more like an audiobook than a narration script.

Peer Feedback:

The demo was done in a professional studio with a Such A Voice producer and sound engineer on ththe same mic. There is always room to improve my demo as my career goes on. But thanks for the feedback James.

Peer Feedback:

Didn't intend to knock Such A Voice, I am familiar with them. Or to promote Edge (which is why I asked if your commercial demo was done by them) because I am familiar with them as well.

However, you may consider sending the demos back to be re-engineered. I sent my commercial demo back to be re-done 3 times before becoming happier (notice I didn't say satisfied) with it before presenting it to my agent. And even then, he re-edited and rearranged the order of the spots to make it more competitive in his judgement.

My advice would be to offer a listen to people you may know in the business, or even strangers, to get an honest appraisal. Your friends and family aren't always good judges because, most likely, they are just going to tell you what you want to hear, which isn't always helpful. They are not the ones who will be your potential clients.

Peer Feedback:

James I appreciate your constructive criticism and believe me there is always room to improve the demos. However, I have been sending my demos to other voiceover artist and I got positive feedback. Currently marketing right now through auditioning and have also cold called companies that work with voiceover artist. Do you have a VoiceZam? I would like to keep in touch with you as well.

Peer Feedback:

There's a good bit of over -articulation in spots.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear moogz's recording

First home studio set up, very much a beginner when it comes to the recording and editing sides of things, and this is the first demo I've attempted to create on my own. I have my own reasons for wanting to fix it up but wanted to put it out there first and get some feedback from people with a better ear and more technical skill than I have. Thanks so much, I appreciate any feedback immensely! -Moogz

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Peer Feedback:

I'd say for the first time out, it's pretty good. As you improve, you'll want to vary your performance a bit. Your demo doesn't give me your range at all; you essentially keep the same voice in each read, even though your reads tackled vastly different areas. I'd lower your music volume just a tad in your demo, and I'd tighten up the space between each read, maybe trim a second in between each one. You also want to "hit the gas" just a tad on your pacing. The Taylor Swift read in particular had some awkward pausing, almost like you got lost in the copy. Work on those things, and you should be well on your way!

Peer Feedback:

Hello, the color of the voice is very cute.
Still improve sound quality. There is a little ambient noise, but can be improved.
For a first demo, I am happy.
Keep it up.
Cheers

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Are you shooting for a commercial demo, a narration demo, or a promo demo? This is a bit of a mish-mash of genres. First cut sounds like a PSA, the second one sounds like a documentary narration, and the third kind of like a promo. Although there is some crossover, each genre is it's own animal. Not a good idea to mix and match genres on a single demo. I always refer people to VoiceBank.net to listen to demos. Every VO talent that has agent representation (Union and Non-Union) has their demos posted there. Most are very good, some not so much. It can be very enlightening

The deliveries are somewhat choppy with pauses after every third or fourth word. Kind of a hickup-y flow. Smooth the sentences out into thought clumps. Resist the temptation to "act the punctuation."

Watch the long A - "...uh world of possibilities" instead of "...Aye world of possibilities"

Got lots of "smile" in the Taylor Swift piece. Really nice. But again, it was a bit choppy. You will only likely get 20 seconds (30 seconds at the most) for that kind of CNN profile promo, so it has to move along.

Really nice voice though.

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Thanks for taking the time to listen and critique!

Noted on the lower volume for the music, picking up the pace, smoothing out the reads, and finding more vocal variety to incorporate more range! I'm sure improving sound quality will be a never-ending endeavor, but I'm so relieved that it seems to be at least acceptable. I've picked up some tricks along the way, so hopefully the next round of recording will have less ambient noise and I'll be able to cut out more annoying mouth noises.

jamesromick, this was meant to be a narration demo. (I already have a commercial one that was recorded professionally for me that I'm happy with. I can post it for fun but won't be making any significant changes to it just yet.) I was trying to tackle a variety of material while trying to keep it under the narration umbrella. I had checked out some demos listed here on Edge, but will definitely check out VoiceBank for more ideas. Finding great material has been surprisingly challenging, but I'm on the lookout for more.

This is very encouraging, thanks again! Looking forward to getting more involved with this community.

-Moogz

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For narration material, look at magazine articles. For things like the Taylor Swift bit, look to People, Us and the more sensational mags that give some narrative biographical background. That cut just rang more toward a program promo.

Also go after subjects that are of interest to you. You'll be able to "personalize" the copy. Travel articles. Fashion. Health & Fitness. Medical breakthroughs. Crime stories. Nature & Wildlife. NatGeo stuff. You'll want to include at least one thing that is a little deep and "heady" along with some "fluff".

What to listen for on VoiceBank.net is not necessarily just the narrative subjects, but also how good demos are constructed - the length and positioning of the spots, different intensities to the different narrative subjects, etc. Narration doesn't always have a soundtrack, sometimes it's just the voice relating the story or subject matter with maybe a few sound FX - birds chirping or wolves howling or sounds of the forest for a nature narrative for instance.

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After receiving training and then recording my commercial and narration demo, the final product is here! Have a listen. Samuel

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The tone of voice is very good, the issue is appropriate. You can hear the voice well. The pace is very good.
Congratulations

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I have to ask.

Is this an Edge produced demo?

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I received training and produced my demo through Such A Voice.

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Good for you for posting your demo and asking feedback. But before I put my 'two cents' in, I should offer up a disclaimer to you. I have not yet made my demo. I am in the middle of training myself and am going to be working with my coach this month on my demo pieces for narration. But I have listened to a number of demos and have received training, so my comments will be based on that comparison.

You obviously put a lot of thought and work into your demo. I especially liked the scripts you chose, for they had variety. However, I didn't always feel as if your delivery showed how they differed. They were times I felt as if they were similar in energy, pacing and tone. Articulation, like final plosives, also got lost in some selections. The music choices were appropriate, but sometimes it seemed louder than your delivery so your voice would get lost.

One thing I did learn is that the demo should only be for one genre. You said it was your commercial and narration demo. Was that something you wanted to do or were told to do? Tell me about Such A Voice? Are they a private studio? I'm curious to know, so I can compare my own notes. I'm still learning too.

Hope I wasn't too discouraging, and others may contradict what I have said. One thing is for certain, you are very talented, and have a great voice!

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Sorry guys this is only a commercial demo. My narration demo is seperate.

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Such A Voice is another voice over education and demo production company that I decided to train with. They do the same voiceover evaluation in the beginning, pair you with a coach and then you meet with your producer to prepare and record your professional demos both commercial and narration. They also offer biweekly teleconferences that lecture on the industry, provide helpful tips and etc. I am marketing now and I believe the program helped me out a lot regarding understanding all areas of the industry. Train, record your demos, have a business plan and continue to study the art of voice overs. And there is always room to update and improve my demos in the later part of my career.

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I welcome any feedback on the uploaded demo. This is my 2nd demo where in I used a combination of prior spots from my 1st demo and new spots where I worked with a Voice coach. Let me know your thoughts on anything you feel should be mentioned. Thanks in advance for listening and your time.

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Very good work. You have shown a variety of intentions in the demo. Quality of editing and recording is very good.
Congratulations on a job well done.
Cheers

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Thanks so much for the feedback FabianNunez, I appreciate it. I will continue on the journey and await more feedback, on the arrangement of the spots. Before I send it out, I want to make sure it is a solid commercial demo that is ready to be sent out.
Thanks again!

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My "Work in Progress" Demo Reel... Only 30 Secs or so at the moment. Looking for feedback on style/script choice and performance, but if you have any recommendation on recording/mixing, ill take it.. Thanks in Advance

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It sounds great man. Watch the "get up tuh"... inflect on the "get up **to**", otherwise sounds great. EQ sounds nice, not too artificial. I like it! I can hear you on an AT&T commercial now!

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I would move the last spot after the first one to give a bigger show of difference between the vocal placements. The second and third seem way too similar. I would keep the third as it showcases another voice option they could hear, but move it to the last spot for now.

Your voice is on top of all the production, which makes it sound like it's a demo made from demo clips. If you bring up the production more on most of the spots, they'll sound more likely to have been real spots.

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Obviously sounds home grown. Some dead giveaways:

- The music mixes are shallow and do not support the voice. An engineer who actually produces voice overs would sweeten up the mix to broadcast standard. It's that "your voice is on top" thing that lisabeanvo mentioned.
- The voice FX processing is virtually the same, leading one to believe that all of these spots were done in the same space, with the same mic, and possibly in the same session. They need to sound like spots that you've done and no two studios have the same setup for their sound. Yeah, it's a demo. Everybody knows it's a demo. But the cuts should sound like real spots - both in delivery and production value.
- Which brings me to the next point. Product/service. I know that the first one is a beer commercial. but what brand? The second one is a cable company, but which one? The last one is an app for an astronaut adventure, is "Adventure" the name of the app? Include a product or service name in the copy, even if you make one up. That's what advertisers are looking for - Can you give a good "billboard" to their brand.
- There is a fine line and some crossover from commercial to narration to promo, but the third cut really belongs on a separate promo demo.

I had the good fortune a couple of weeks ago to attend a seminar at the SAG VO Lab in NYC on demos and demo production. The instructor talked about "the music" of VO and how it fits into demo construction. Listening to your production, three of the four cuts (the promo being the exception) have virtually the same "music" to them. They all lie in the same vocal pitch range in your voice and start on virtually the same pitch center - even to the point that the first two cuts (if you eliminate the music beds) sound like they could be all the same spot. The tone of the last one is different, but the relative vocal dynamic pitch range is the same. There's also a pacing consideration. The general pacing of all of the cut is nearly the same. The well crafted beer spot has the same "excitement" and speed of delivery as the cable deal spot. And so on.

And then there's elocution and articulation.
- "With two hundred..." sounded like "wIToo..."- The W was almost absent as well as the TH.
- "...get three lines with up to..." sounded like "...git three lines widupta..."
- Watch "c'n" for "can" - In the last cut. "You can now schedule..." came out "Y'c'now schedule..."

Yes. Demos are expensive. It is tempting to self-produce. But consider that you are marketing something to compete with a vast number of voice artists who have had their demos done in a professional studio with engineers who produce them for a living. Offering up a sub-par demo will not serve you well in a very competitive business.

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Thanks a lot guys for the feedback. I have a lot of things to think about. I had made up some brands for these spots, but thought not to included the, as its seem dishonest to use real brands/ads and the fake ones I thought might be giveaways.

I can definitely see the value in a full produced demo, but they are so expensive, so I want to make sure I'm "ready". Obviously at home, I can fix and replace and redo at my own pace,

Regarding the performance aspect, would a pro help with this as well or is the main benefit to using a pro the FX processing and music selection?

Thanks again

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James is sharp on the performance issues.
But I am wondering, if the trend is now to home studios (as per voices.com), whether that home-produced sound in some cases is more like giving the client a taste of what he/she will get. Should everything sound like you went out & read somewhere else, if that happens less often nowadays?
Just asking.
Kate

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ok, I get two, right? ;) So, I want to get paid to laugh, as such I've made myself a laughter demo. Looking for feedback. Does it make you want to laugh? (meaning I'm genuine sounding) Do I adequately capture different emotions. Are there any that sound too much alike? Etc etc. Thanks all! This was SO fun to make (and a way to break the no homemade demos rule lol)

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Very cool. Particularly liked the snort - wanted more of that.

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Always leaving 'em wanting more! Success! :D Thanks James!

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Like the variety! They do mostly sound pretty genuine and a few made me smile along.
Very interesting.

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The audio quality is good, choice between styles. It sounds genuine.

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hehehe this made me laugh, so bonus points for that. :)
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Made this for Voice Registry, and then totally forgot to email in time :( It's not my favorite piece; I found the copy difficult, but I do like a good challenge. All of that added up to me being really curious as to what the agent this week would have said! I have my own ideas on what kind of feedback I'd have gotten, but I'm interested in what you think too! Thanks.

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You have a great easy, conversational quality! Very clear and well paced.

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Nit pic: Fully form "recognize" - rek-uh g-nahyz instead of rek-uh-nahyz. And the double glottal on "important" was just a little too Valley Girl, especially since the rest of it is really smooth and Midwest articulate.

Otherwise, it's a winner!

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If the only thing to complain about are nitpicks, I consider that a huge success. I didn't hear the recognize, so thanks for that.

The important is pretty much what finalized the decision to post it here. I tried really hard, and my tongue WAS properly placed, but I do believe it's time to meet with a speech therapist again. My t's are becoming my biggest nuisance (which just means my a-nasals and other things are improving? lol That's what I'll go with.) and is what seems to hold my reads up more than anything else right now.

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It was mostly clipping off the final T that was Valley Girl-ish. In my book, the glottal in the middle is perfectly acceptable - a little tap of the tongue might be better, but hitting a hard T would probably sound too overly articulate and foreign to the Middle American ear.

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The first sentence would disqualify this read as "american neutral." Recognize and important got noticed within the first few seconds. Looking back to James' comments, he heard it as well. Tone and tempo can't overcome technique. If the specs call for less than AmNuetral then maybe this could work. I've noticed some local stations are allowing for "local" diction ...so maybe this could sell.

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Any thoughts? Thanks - Jim

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Might be in the processing, but again, just a little mushy with some mouth noise as well.

One particular word (group of words) stuck as a little unintelligible, "there were" came out as "thurrwerr".

The first and last "vote" was almost "boat" - I missed a clear V sound, which could have been softened in the processing.

This next comment has nothing to do with your recording, interpretation or recording quality - which are all very good. Just jumping up on my soapbox.

That last line of the text is really confusing for me, historically. It has only been within the last 50 years or so (since after Alaska and Hawaii became states in 1959) that there has been a full compliment of 537 members of Congress. (And how many people actually realize that that is what the number refers to?) So how far and/or when and'/or what event(s) is "back then" in the text referring to? (And, for that matter, how many times has Congress been swayed by a single vote? And how many people remember from Civics Class that the VP is the tie-breaker in the Senate? - Now, there's your One Vote!) Or is the message purposefully vague and intentionally misleading as most political ads are? I know that my vote is important, a privilege and my civic duty. So, as a well-informed voter, I ponder these things.

Hopping back down off my soapbox now.

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Thanks for your input, James. I appreciate you taking the time to write a response.

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Jim- I thoroughly enjoy the tone of your voice and thought it was read quite well. The music bed was a perfect choice. GREAT JOB!

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Hi Folks, I agreed to help Kate in order to help the entire forum to get a better understanding in post processing and the auditioning process. Kate asked me to review her files, unfortunately they were mp3 and not a wav file (raw unprocessed). Her files, the first was unprocessed, not touched by eq or any edits is the one I used in the second half of the upload. Her processed file is the first you will hear. Both files were actually pretty good in the recording quality after she made adjustments in her booth that both James Romick and I suggested. Once that was taken care of and controlled a bit better, I could get a better understanding of the "actual" recording and the remaining problem frequencies left to contend with. Both files were identical except that Kate had applied some post processing, removing some breaths and applying some eq on her edited version. The Analysis: The recordings had both a fullness and a bit of muddyness. On a female vocal this usually is in the range between 320-450Hz in the frequency spectrum. Her files where sitting about +3db in that range and the upper harmonics were below 0 sitting around -3db which is why you don't hear as much presence or "sparkle" in the recording. This is usually done in post anyways as most home studio owners using lower end interfaces and mics are limited in that regard recording direct into their daw. So what did I do? I used a highpass filter and dropped anything below 120Hz out of the mix. I brought down the frequencies between 250-900Hz to 0 and brought everything from 1.6kHz up to zero using a generic 30 band eq to try and balance the mix. I went and looked for the problem frequencies and started to make adjustments. From 1.6kHZ-4.8kHz I added 3db of gain. I also boosted +2 db between 8kHz and 10kHz to give it some high harmonic "sparkle". There is some sibilance poking through that I would normally use a de-esser on, but didn't for the sake of this exercise as I wanted to use generic base tools provided in most daws. I'm not a twisted waves user so I just don't know the limitations, however their manual has nothing on the eq in it, so I can't make a recommendation in that regard. So does Kate have a good enough signal path to send in auditions? Based on this file I think she is closer, and would only need to find a free eq with adjustable bands to start to learn to control her recordings in Twisted Wave if she intends to stay with that daw. I could work with files she sends me. Other engineers might choose someone with cleaner sounding files. It all depends on whether the Client has to have that voice for the character, or delivery etc. This is a very competative business and there are hundreds of actors to choose from. So it is all in the ear of the beholder. In retrospect, it took me longer to write this than it did to process the file. So that is a good thing Kate! Danny

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Hi, Danny, thanks for your help. The problem I still have is that I don't understand the technical info in the first part of your comment, it feels as if I would need a graduate degree in engineering to understand it. There are several different free eq's that Apple offers - would any of them work? perhaps I could try one of them if you would recommend it. I have only used the parametric equalizer with one band among the Apple offerings.
I am here in my office which hasn't great sound, & perhaps if I go up into my studio I will hear the difference between these two recordings. I don't hear it now.
The question is, of course, that I do narration, not commercials, & I have what Edge called an "audition-quality" studio. I am not going to add music or anything like that. So can I continue as is while I am searching to know how to fix these problems?

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The problem Kate, is that you need to learn the fundamentals of the home studio to make the best use of it. The days of "come on in and record this for us" are gone unless the client requests it or you are a celebrity.

If you want to be competitive in the business, especially in the P2P world you need to sound better than every one else or really have a voice and delivery that blows everyone away.

There is no magic button to make a vocal sound good. You asked if your studio setup would work in the meantime while you learn this? I'm sure it will work for you with the adjustments you made to it so far. There is still a way to go, as everyone here and those "out there working it" are learning to improve everyday as well.

A single band eq won't help you a considerable amount. I would recommend finding and using a 5 or 7 band eq so that you can work within the frequencies that need adjustment. It's taken me 2 years to start to understand what I'm doing with using eq, compression, reverb etc. It'll probably take me another 2-3 to get to the level I feel will bring me to a true professional level.

As for the Apple/Twisted wave solution, you willl need to work with someone that knows that environment. My assessment was just to try and help you to understand where you could make improvements. Again, no magic button.

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Great lesson. you should do youtube videos.

did you add stereo width to the remix? just curious.
it's definitely brighter.
V123 conveniently removes most of the hard work one puts into tuning their auditions - when they convert it to mono 128K mp3s. A bit frustrating.

EQ recommendation:
Try the MaagEQ4 plugin (6 bands) - but it's not freeware, and it's definitely not a surgical EQ.

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Hi Dave,

Thanks for the comment, I didn't add any stereo width in the mix itself. On bounce everything ran through stereo, as would any project using a daw. The funny thing about audio is when the lower frequencies are prominent, the "brighter" information tends to get buried sounding more like mono or "center field". Once you "open" up the upper harmonics the sound is brighter and fuller in the stereo spectrum.

Having said that, I do mix in mono prior to bounce. It's a great little trick the pros use to hear artifacts and instruments competing with each other for frequencies. It's important to hear the difference a-b'ing between the 2 because no one really sits perfectly in the center for a stereo field as well. In your car you either sit left field or right field, same with home stereos. Ear buds in portable devices tend to give you more of that stereo image however. Having a mix sound good in mono and then bounce to stereo really makes it sound full.

The business of mixing is just as competitive as VO, in fact probably more because if your mixes don't sound good, no one wants you to do their demo or project and you sit on a ton of gear with no money coming in. :)

So for places like V123 make sure your mix sounds great in mono! If you have everything panned hard L<->R with heavy emphasis, all that information will either get squashed or sound crappy. Vocals, bass, kick drum are always center. Guitars, BU vox and keys are usually panned as you would see them onstage. Hope that helps.

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I have redone studio as per Dan's suggestion, w blanket in corner over a ladder, repositioned mic. I have carpet on floor, foam everywhere but corners where it doesn't fit, towel on copy stand & under mac outside. To answer James, I have twisted wave, focus rite, small closet booth, macbook outside. mic stays on stand inside. I am not sure I have fixed the hollowness & too much bass. What do you think? Performance is here because I never turn down comments on it, but I really need comments on sound

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Kate:
I was not picking up any background reverberation noises (it that is what you were concerned about), but there were a fair amount of breathing and mouth popping noises in your read. I hope that helps.
All the Best,
Michael Whalen

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Definitely getting closer. Dan's suggestions about your mic placement and the draped material seemed to have good effect.

I'm not all that familiar with Twisted Wave (I use a PC and as far as I know it's strictly a Mac product), but there is a feature that I would really like to see incorporated in other DAW's. It's a "paste special" feature where you can save a snippet of room tone in the clipboard and paste/replace it into a highlighted portion of the wave form (like an obtrusive breath. pop or click) and it cross-fades in and out seamlessly, It can even be used in to fill in gaps for pacing (good for long form and audiobook production).

The "gating" effects that I hear (which Dan and TxTom don't seem to hear) are probably those shallow, quick breaths (catch breaths) that seem a bit truncated (kind of like a soft hickup). The most evident one is after "behavior" in the second sentence. It could also be that when you take those breaths, you're turning away from the mic slightly. Dunno, just guessing.

You do a lot of those catch breaths. And here is where that "paste special" feature could come in handy. For instance: In the first sentence, there were 3 breaths in the middle that could have been edited out, replaced and the pacing adjusted with a snippet of room tone for a better overall arc and flow to the narrative - as it is, it's just a little choppy. The same could be said throughout. If this was fully produced with a good VO engineer, that's what would more than likely happen.

Your vocal quality and delivery style are generally quite appealing. (Kinda reminds me of a female version of David McCullough.) You may have conquered your background noise and reflection problem. Time to dig into the software and discover how to tweak it (with noise reduction, EQ, compression, effective editing, etc.) to really make these narratives pop. George Whittam is a huge Twisted Wave devotee and offers webinar classes via Edge. (Disclaimer: Not a commercial advertisement for Edge, he's just one of the best resources for this particular software specifically for VO.) You might catch the next one when it's offered. He even offers private consultations. Worth a shot.

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This is Kate, thanks, James. I think what you are hearing is my editing defects, i.e. that I try to cut out the breaths & don't do it completely. I do this according to what I heard on one of these webinars which is that you reduce the sound to -12, the regular being 0, so you maintain the pacing but eliminate the breath. That seemed better because putting in room noise etc seemed fancier than I am capable of. But I guess I have to start looking into it. I use Apple's parametric equalizer, which does one thing, again the minimum. Again, it is anything to fancy that scares hell out of me. Also I have spent a lot of money without bringing any in, & feel I should try to get paid for something before I spend any more money. That's what got me on the feedback forum, & you guys have been absolutely fabulous!

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Hi Kate,

Big difference in sound. If you wouldn't mind, could you send me that file via dropbox or wetransfer https://www.wetransfer.com/ (<-probably easier), and let me have a look at the raw file and allow me to process it a bit to see what frequencies are still giving a bit of a problem. as I said it a big difference from where you started. I just want to see if i can help you in the last stretch to clean up your sound.

Danny@totalmixandmaster.com

Danny

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I would advise you to take Dan up on his generous offer. He's real tech savvy and might be able to help you create an FX processing stack. Don't psych yourself out. You'll get to that "Aha!" moment where using the tools in Twisted Wave won't be that daunting. There's really not a whole lot that you have to do to manipulate the sound you're producing. But some surgical editing skills may also be required. Sometimes if you zoom in really tight on the wave form, you can actually see and begin to recognize blips, pops, breaths and things to snip out and manipulate without even having to listen to it. Twisted Wave is more than capable of getting you there.

BUT - Don't jump the gun. If you start shopping around an inferior product (sound quality wise), you won't get many takers (meaning paying clients), even if your reads are drop dead wonderful. Especially if you intend to or are asked to produce from your home studio. You've got to be able to wear that engineer/editor hat. The alternative is to send your raw file to someone like Dan and pay them to process your audio for it to be up to snuff.

I do kind of the same thing with my breath sounds. I knock them down a further -18dB from where they are recorded (usually between -12dB and -3dB) on my audiobook productions. I came to that number by trial and error. I've tried 3 different popular de-breather plugins and found them ineffective (for me) as my breath sounds are rather loud - the de-breathers actually identify my breaths as words, so most of them don't get processed at all. But my software fades out and in so as not to make the level change too abrupt and create a "pumping" effect. And sometimes I have to manipulate them even further. It's tedious, but it seems to work for ACX/Audible. Haven't had one kicked back yet.

As far as the monetary outlay goes, I think we all hear you and can relate., But if you intend to pursue this, consider it an investment. Some costs may even be tax deductible as professional business expense (equipment, classes, coaching, agent commissions, fees to join the P2P's, etc.).

If you do send Dan a file, I'd be interested in hearing the before and after contrast. So many others could benefit from that kind of thing on the Forum - some only require little tweaks here and there. I wish there was a kind of private communication and "file sharing" feature here like there is on some other forum sites. I talked to David Goldberg about that a couple of years ago when he first mentioned that they were going to revamp the website. Apparently that whole process is very slow going.

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Hey James,
I am about to answer Danny. I'd send you a copy but don't have your email address. Mine is Kate@HearKate.com. If you'd like to join us, do. I think perhaps the rest of the world has had enough of my problems. you both are wonderful!

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The "new website" has been in the works for over 3 years. It'll be old by the time it's new.

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Hi especially James & Dan, whom I thank for their previous helpful comments. I'm back again, this time, having accepted the fact that the earlier recording is not usable. But it was made before I added the additional foam to my room & had the engineer move the mic set up around. BTW I use the round cable Dan mentioned. This recording is what I use as my "studio sample"& was made a few weeks ago. It is mono - the earlier one was stereo possibly because the director was fooling around w the controls. OK, I will generally try to do more research on sound, but am perhaps a little less stupid than I appeared before. So does this sound decent for an audition quality studio? Also, if anyone has any comments on the performance, that' always interesting. Thanks. Kate

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Hi Kate,

Great timing/cadence. I like the slightly gravelly sound in your voice.
A bit distracting is 'hissing' with the s's. A challenge common for all of us. I don't know exactly what might work for your voice, but perhaps there's a sound-processing function that might soften those s's?
Great stuff! Keep it up!!
Cheers!
Michael

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Dan is more savvy along the technical side than I am. (I went to audio engineering school back in the mid-80's when we were still using reel to reel tape machines and editing with razor blades.)

The deadening material helped considerably. And although foam is used quite extensively (like Aurelax Acoustical Foam), it can't be just any foam (like mattress foam). And different thicknesses will give you different results. Plus (from what I have learned from talking with George Whittam and others), foam is not necessarily the ideal solution (especially for small spaces). The theory being that it is more porous then, say, fabric (moving blankets- which are much less expensive than foam) and in close proximity to the mic the sound actually bounces back through the foam from the solid surface it is mounted on. (In a large studio, that's not that much of a factor. The foam is more of a sound diffuser than a sound deadener.)

I would ask:
What software are you using? (All are pretty much the same in that they only understand the digital 1's and 0's going in to your computer. It's the features and settings that can make a difference in use.)
What processing (if any) did you use for this recording?
And do you know what sample rate and bit rate you're recording to (going in) and rendering to (going out to WAV's or MP3's)?

There is still just a little reflection and a certain "hollowness" to the sound. I'm not quite certain of the cause. For one, you seem pretty close to the mic and/or the mic may be close to a reflective (hard) surface. There also seems to be a certain "gating" effect being triggered by your breaths (might be your editing or possibly a de-breather plugin?). It's kind of inconsistent in that it's catching, eliminating, clipping and/or minimizing some of the breath sounds and leaving some others untouched. I experimented with 3 different de-breathers and achieved little to no success with them, so I just do it through editing (a tedious process, but it works for me).

You're getting closer, but there's still a bit more tweaking to do to achieve a demo/audition quality sound. It might also help to know what your recording environment is. Big room? Small room like a closet? Carpeted floor? Treated ceiling? Mic on a stand or boom? Is the mic "breathing" (more or less in the open and not surrounded by a box, that eyeball thingie or a mudflap kind of accessory)? Any exposed hard, reflective surfaces like a desk or a window or a bare wall?

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Kate,

A dramatic improvement in the sound. I didn't hear any gating effects on the breaths but there is still a problem in the lower mids that needs to be corrected (hollowness). With the current mic placement (depending on how it is setup) I would recommend pointing the back of the mic towards a corner of the closet/booth). I would hang a blanket straight across the corner behind the mic and have the mic at least 1-2 feet away from the corner. To me it sounds like the mic is picking up from the back of the room. On the mic itself, the "dot" should be facing you for proper pickup. as a suggestion, position the mic capsule (top of the mic) about 20-30 degrees away from you and the top of the mic (height) should be just around your bottom lip when you read and you should be 6-8 inches away. Hold your copy up beside the mic and don't look down when you read. Try those suggestions and see if that makes a correction in the current setup. You are almost there. It's all part of the journey my dear!

Dan

Peer Feedback:

If Dan didn't hear the "gating" effect, then disregard my comment - his ears are younger than mine.

And do take his suggestions on mic placement to heart. It could be some "back slap" reflection that I heard. Dunno.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you both, I will work on this later today, and thanks so much, Michael, for your encouraging words!
Kate

Peer Feedback:

I didn't hear any gating on the file.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear lisabeanvo.com's recording

THE TIME HAS FINALLY COME!!! This is hot off the presses folks. Not a master copy, but my first mp3 of the demo! I'm really really happy with it. And I feel like I'm def gonna book some work. Just need a website and branding!! SO EXCITED!!! That really is ME guys! :D

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Peer Feedback:

Hi Bean,

Great sound! Energy at good level... Music a little hot, It's a great start.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks marysboy :) I appreciate the constructive criticism.

I'm really stoked on it, and am getting good feedback in general. The final is just so different from what we started with; taking several minutes of ads and cutting them down to just over a minute -it's crazy! I'm sure the producer wants to bring his signature to it too, but overall, I'm happy with the vocal track and the way the MB lays behind it, or with it! lol He's a pro; I trust him (Rick at Santisound).

This is the final cut, produced by THE Nancy Wolfson, who is also really excited by the final product. (She's gonna put me on her website's talent list yo!!!! OMG did I die and go to heaven?) And while she did produce it so she has reason to be excited, it's so fun to watch my first VO project come to fruition. The first of many, I hope!

I'm open to any other comments guys! lol From first recording here to this... a loooooong, crazy ride! Couldn't have done it without ya!

Peer Feedback:

Great job and congratulations. Good luck to you. I still need to have a demo produced and can't wait. A high quality demo such as this only fuels my desire to get it done sooner than later.

Peer Feedback:

Hi Bean - GREAT job! Lots of range and a really natural sound to your voice- someething I struggle with so I can appreciate the effort here.
Best of luck to you!

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Thanks mmack237 & me@mary ;) It's a real chest puffer, I'll admit! :D

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Click to hear TotalMixandMaster.com's recording

Redid an old one from a while ago but wanted to work on a darker character again. The scene: A guardian of the woods i approached by someone entering the forest. He tells him the story of the Fairies as a warning, as he walks around tending to his fire. Just setting the stage ... As you can tell I'm working on a particular type of character. Just close your eyes and enjoy! How's the mix? I removed the earlier one (uploaded the bounced original by mistake), this is the mastered version.

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Peer Feedback:

Love this! I am not an expert but to me you have done an excellent job. The vocals are clear and the delivery really draws the listener into the story. Great work!

Peer Feedback:

Thank you Danasue!

Peer Feedback:

OK, I'm fawning over the production...crisp, wide. The night forest ambience and something else - a camp fire crackling?
Great voice effect. it's like Smaug telling us about fairies. I can almost smell the soot.

you're using some very sophisticated compression/limiter on the output (a plugin?). it's very thick, with a pretty aggressive threshold....hmmm.

I would love to know the recipe used there.
I'll bet you've put together one hell of a trailer demo.

I'm a fan. keep em coming.

DS.

Peer Feedback:

Dave, Thank you! That is the nicest compliment I have gotten here since I started a few years back. There was a fire with him walking around and stoking it while telling the story. I wanted to give the character life and a real life type of setting. Too bad there wasn't a visual, but I will be "re"-doing you tube trailers as a fan to my favorites. I'll post links when I do them.

As for the processing, there are a few tricks that went into this one. It didn't take that long to do, but I have learned from and become friends with, some really great producers and mixers in the industry. I've applied what I've learned to the sound design trade, and here I am. I'm not interested in producing bands, just games and trailers. Again I use all top notch sound fx, I play around on my keyboard for background ambiance and dramatic effects. But the mix (which I think you liked most) is all in getting the right levels on the mixer. There is vocal processing. I used a pitch bend on the vocal (down 1.5 semitones), a Waves C6 compressor (default settings A) to tame any peaks, and a Waves HReverb to give it some space. That's all the processing used on the vocal.

The rest was in the mix and getting the right balance. Its something I learned over the last couple of years. I wouldn't recommend running out and buying plugins, because chances are you won't get the same results until you learn to control the shape of the sound (find free or use stock plugins), and by that you need to learn sound and how to manipulate it, then work the volumes to find the balance to get the results you want. I did a bit of automation on the plugins and the vocal to make certain words pop out a bit more from the mix. Depending on my mood and the result I want, I have several pieces of analog gear that I run the final mix through for that polished sound. I won't tell you how much I've spent on gear, but I'm starting to learn and understand the techniques and get the results I want now. I'm still really new at this and learning everyday. In a couple of years I should be where I want to be

There's the secrets! :)

Danny

Peer Feedback:

Danny -
thanks for sharing. I love dabbling in and learning post production.
Maybe I'll ping you offline someday to talk about VO demo & audition production techniques. I'd like to kick it up a notch.

I like the concept of over-dubbing youtube vids for demo purposes and practice...I've done a couple myself (VO for commercials) purely for fun. I've posted some of them on my Vimeo page. Logic Pro X makes it pretty easy.

cheers!
DS.

question: do you use a Distressor?

Peer Feedback:

Hi Dave,

No distressor used. I try to keep a clean master bus too. I sometimes put a limiter on it but usually I do all my processing on the tracks or aux buses prior to the 2 bus and print. I don't want any compression or limiting on the mixdown. I use an Antelope Zodiac for mastering.

Peer Feedback:

Man, what's there really to say about this that hasn't been already said ha ha! This is a fantastic sounding read, the ambience in the background really helps nail the mood and your voice inspires the image of a shadowy being selling the tale of the fairies as if it's been a personal experience of his and not just a passed along story! Amazing job!

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Thanks so much Benjamin, really appreciate the kind words and comments. You have a lot of talent yourself. Really enjoyed your yogurt read!

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Dave I just posted another sound design project on my vimeo account. Check this one out, your gonna love it! https://vimeo.com/145567088

Peer Feedback:

I like the Johnny Cash song in the mix.
it seems that oldies are becoming popular in game trailers. e.g. Fallout 4.

Peer Feedback:

Ya it seems to be the case on game trailers for launch videos. I think I may have to dust off some off my vinyl collection and bounce them to digital. :)

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear danasue7's recording

First try at a demo. Any feedback is appreciated!

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Peer Feedback:

I forgot to mention that the recording is of my daughter, age 9. :)

Peer Feedback:

Your daughter has a great voice and I think it will really suit all kinds of voice overs. I am a beginner, and to my ears it definitely sounds awesome. The narration is very clear and I would certainly listen to a voice over work done by her with no problems.

Peer Feedback:

Your daughter should be auditioning for stuff on Nickelodeon.

As a demo, the individual cuts might be too long and the demo in total might be too long. But it's really good stuff. She's far ahead of the game.

My advice would be to contact a coach and/or demo producer that specializes in kids' demos and get their suggestions on how to put together a really good, effective and competitive demo.

Peer Feedback:

For 9, she's doing great. You'll want your demo to be about 1:10 or shorter. Show variety. I know it's tough to cut great stuff, but select some of the best and pare this down to about a minute.

My daughters have taken sessions with Noelle Romano and really like her. She works very well with kids and adults. Highly recommend.

Nate

Peer Feedback:

Hi Danasue,

Your child has a bright future ahead of her! There are lots of resources out there to help you, The demo should be less than 1:20 max. Below are some helpful tips to assist you.

- Feature between 5-7 original character pieces
- Each piece is 10-15 seconds in length to show that you can sustain the character voice
- It’s better to have fewer distinctive characters than too many similar sounding ones
Highlights your versatility and talent with a focus on energy, humour and fun!

Also I have given a few links for demos done by kids in various genres. Search their directory and have a listen to others as well. There is a link to a site for Parents that want to get their kids in the business too, It's very helpful for finding agents, contracts, and tons of other resources.

A coach I find that is highly recommended is Stevie Vallance. Noelle is great too! here are the links ... good luck to you both.

http://www.bizparentz.org/thebizness/voiceoversforkids.html

http://www.thevoicerealm.com/view-profile-artist.php?artist_id=1663

http://www.thevoicerealm.com/view-profile-artist.php?artist_id=1153

http://stevievallance.com/

Peer Feedback:

Thank you so much everyone for your comments and feedback! I was thinking it was too long, but hadn't researched enough yet to confirm that. The advice you've given has been extremely helpful and we now have great direction on potential coaches and making her demo.

Professional Feedback:

Hi Danasue!

As many have already mentioned-- your daughter has a lovely, expressive voice and shows nice potential for this industry. Also as mentioned, a demo is a very specific tool and needs to fit into certain conventions. For a child her age, we may have 3-4 commercial spots adding up to no longer than a minute; each showing a different tone. (for example, a high energy upbeat toy spot, a low energy serious PSA, etc) The goal is to show range and versatility within a given genre such as commercial or animation. And the genres should never be mixed on one demo. It is hard to determine a child's true potential until you get them in the booth and see how able they are to hold focus over a period of time and follow the producer's direction. And I would say the biggest factor in determining if the child should do this is the child herself-- this should be fun for her and something she LOVES doing and learning to do well. Good luck!

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach November 16, 2015 at 6:07PM
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Click to hear Hagloch Media's recording

I am a student at the Illinois Media School in Lombard IL and I have just created my demo. I would love some feedback as I take my break out steps into the field.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi HM,

Overall I think you have a good start and a long career in VO if you stick to it. It's a tough biz.

First spot was great. Most of those spots are high energy and a quick read, so well done on that and the right spot for it - 1st spot.

Second spot you need to work on. It sounded like "Jus sshwaned-to tell you ..."

Third spot. Slurs and other key points missed. Watch articulation and timing. (excursion and Ex-Elvis) Practice tongue twisters to work on tricky words and phrases. You get lots of them in the real world and it can throw your game off.

Fourth Spot. The telephone filter works, but you are going to have one spot that just showcases your voice naked. I would probably pick this one for that. I work with a few casting directors now and agencies and I asked for feedback for a client on a demo I am producing and she gave me a ton of tips. Seems the talent pool is big they are really looking for specific things on demos.

Fifth Spot. Good job, a bit of crackling in the recording but the clarity in the voice was nice.

Sixth spot. good accent. Needs a bit more to really be convincing. But nice job overall. With a Director helping you, you would nail it. (listen to "worthy guests such as yourself") for example. There was a bit of a stumble in there I picked up.

Seventh spot. Good job on the vocal. The effects need to be wider to make it sound nice (kids giggling really adds a nice touch tho!) Maybe doubling the effect and panning left and right might help you on that one.

Eight spot. Radio imaging on this demo I would drop. The effects on the vocal don't sound great and upfront like radio stations use. The read also needs to be in your face. Keep the demo at 1 minute.

As for overall quality, your vocal is pretty good. I would give the demo another round, even pay a coach to sit with you for an hour to go over it and critique it fully. It's worth the money, trust me! Good luck and good fortune to you! -dk-

Peer Feedback:

Thanks DK for all the notes, and for breaking it down spot for spot. What I like about submitting to these forums is that I actually GET feedback. At school they are just compliments of shock and awe!

The first spot was actually not mixed by me but my first paid recording. The energy is great which is why I threw it in the front.

Not to break down the rest as meticulously as you did, I'd like to comment on a few things. You are right with the Elvis piece but I wanted to show the character voice that I did. I agree that I can allow for my tongue to play hockey in my mouth and tie me up. I will work on that and try those twisters you suggested.

As for the last spot being a radio, I agree that for VO work it wouldn't really help me but I wanted to show versatility and end with a high energy piece as well.

Peer Feedback:

Your welcome. I tend to give feedback on those that offer it to me as well. Its how we grow - together! I get that the Elvis spot is a character, and that they are impersonators. Not drunk Elvis tho! As for the imaging spot, honestly, my advice is to lose it. It doesn't go on a commercial or promo demo anyways. Radio imagin is done inhouse most of time. Chances are you will never get work doing it so stay focused on where the money is and do them for fun and throw them on your website or FB page.

Peer Feedback:

Can't add too much to what TotalMix said. Just a couple of observations though.

The first spot is obviously lifted from a produced spot and it's very, very good. The rest are a little aurally muddy, in that the articulation is a little sloppy, the S's are muffled and not as clear as the first spot.

The Elvis thing doesn't work for me simply because it sounds too much like you, there's little vocal distinction, like you recorded it in one shot. If you're married to the idea, you might try recording those lines separately after taking a break to give them a different timbre and character. They may sound a little more distinct that way.

I agree to dump the radio imaging spot. Not useful for a strictly commercial demo (unless you actually did the job).

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Alicia Condrey's recording

Just put together my first Character Demo Reel. Let me know what you think!

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Peer Feedback:

Very professional sounding. Did you produce all of this in a home studio? Where do you get the music and sound effects? Anyway, keep up the good work! You have a future out there!
Mike W.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you, Mike! I did produce all of it in my home studio. I'm actually tweaking it a bit more as I type! I got all the music/sound effects at freesfx.co.uk

I'll upload the adjusted version in a bit, if you care to give that a listen as well. :)

Peer Feedback:

These voices are great! I love the inflections and personality behind all of them! The sound fx and beds are so great!!! Great job!

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much! I've actually changed it up a bit since then. If you're interested, both my commercial demo and character demos can be found on Sound Cloud: https://soundcloud.com/alicia-condrey/sets/demos

I'm actually going to redo my Commercial Demo soon. As I was listening over it again, I noticed in a couple of the tracks the EQ was off, the music bed sounded 'metallic' and they have too much variety in character when it needs more variety in read styles.

It's amazing how much you guys and other outlets have helped me learn so much! I've only been in the VO world for a month, bit it feels so right and I just 'get it', ya know? :D

Peer Feedback:

Alicia:
Sorry it took so long to get back to you, but I did check out that website and saved it to my favorites. Thanks. I'm kind of curious. What kind of studio do you have in your house? Do you have a sound booth? What do you use to eliminate room reverberations? I'm having an issue with reflected noise. If you would, contact me at Michael@michaelsvoices.com.
Thanks!
Mike W.

Peer Feedback:

For sure, Mike! I'm composing the email now. :)

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Desi Waters's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Slow down about ten of fifteen percent. Sounded like you were trying to get through it as fast as possible. Other than that, sounded good. Where do you get the sound effects and music?
Mike W.

Peer Feedback:

Sounds self-produced. Most, if not all, of the voice tracks sound like they were done with the same mic in the same session in the same studio with the same levels and the same processing. They don't "pop", production wise. And some of the music and backgrounds don't seem to "mix" or blend well with the voice track in that their FX chain (EQ, compression and whatnot) seem a little "off" somehow to the voice track - a separate kind of sound.

The performances, copy choices and overall structure are fine. It just needs a more "professionally produced" and polished quality to the sound.

If I am totally wrong, which admittedly I quite often am, and you did have this professionally produced, I would approach the producer to re-tool it.

For instance, one of Edge's suggestions is to have separate spots not only sound like actual commercials that you've done (whether that's true or not) but also sound as if they were done in different studios at different times as no two studios' sound quality is exactly alike or that even the same studio's sound quality is the same on any given number of sessions.

Peer Feedback:

Make sure you are well hydrated. Heard some mouth noise especially in the Oreida spot. Lift the last "go" in "go, go, go!"

Do be afraid of a little terminal lift if you are trying to convey great enthusiasm.

Nate

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Tpossick's recording

Hi, this is a compilations of projects that I have worked on but am afraid that it may not offer enough range - however, wondering if it is ok because it defines my style. Thoughts? Thanks in advance.

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Peer Feedback:

You sound very professional, like you have been doing this for a long time. Where do you get the music and sound effects?
All the Best,
Michael Whalen

Peer Feedback:

Sounds great actually thought I had a pop up add lol keep up the great work I like

Peer Feedback:

Let me be completely honest: I LOVED IT! I think there's plenty of variety and the quality is great! I'm still new to VO, but from what I heard, amazing! :)

Peer Feedback:

The sound is slightly hot (-3db is the norm for normalization and this is right at 0db.) But aside from the volume, this file is extremely sibilant. HEAVY on the treble range. I was listening through some Sony MDR-7506 headphones which are not nearly as bright in sound as the AKG-K240s I used to use...and you came sizzling though on the Sony cans.

Peer Feedback:

The spots and structure of the demo seem fine. Worked a lot for Fisher-Price, huh? Would think that's a pretty good gig.

To piggyback on TxTom's comment - Did you put this together yourself, or have an engineer splice it together? Either way, I agree with TxTom that it is a little bright on the upper frequencies and somewhat sibilant at times. And the levels from spot to spot seem a little erratic, but it is a little hot.

Only my 2c.

Peer Feedback:

Hi all! Thank you so much for compliments and feedback. I was insecure of the structure, and yes, because of all of the fisher price work that I've done.

Mwjrnc - I did not produce these spots myself. It was the audio that I extracted from some of my spots. I did cut it myself, though.

Txtom/jamesromick - thanks for the more technical feedback! I don't know much about sound in that way. Yes, I put it together myself. So these are clips that I extracted and not master files or anything. Any advice on how I can make it sound better? How do I make it sound cohesive and not as "hot"?

Thanks,
Tania

Peer Feedback:

Lucky you - you sound like Scarlett Johansson. (IMO). She has a cheery sound with just a touch of raspiness. It comes out in your Starbucks, Fischer Price and Aquabed spots.
your demo sounded really nice, but I agree with the comments about the high end being too hot.

One other production kudo: the Purdue spot is outside, so it (correctly) sounds "outside", not in a studio. Makes a big difference, and is a nice change up in the demo mix.

to reduce some of the high end, consider using some EQ to pull it down.

cheers,
DS

Peer Feedback:

Oh Dave, you are SO right! She does have that Scarlett quality to her, which is great cuz I see her in HER mentioned all the time on specs.

One thing I've noticed for bilingual VO actors is that when adding in a Spanish speaking clip on an English demo most leave it for the end, or as part of a bilingual spot, just to showcase, but the agents listening to your English demo don't NEED to know you speak Spanish in the middle.

If you want Spanish work, work on a Spanish demo. It's the hottest VO market right now :)

I like your F/P and Aquabed tracks best. I think those are the ones you sound most Scarlett in, and I'd move them to the beginning. The Starbucks one is a little hot, but also one of your best vocal placements! Def should be up front too. I think the current first third and Spanish could be moved to the back. Pimp that Scarlett girl!

Just some opinions :)

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Dave Clarke's recording

This is just a quick little demo of some station imaging I just did for Epicuria Radio 90.9 FM. Please let me know what you think. Thanks for the listen!

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Peer Feedback:

That sounded really cool, very nice quality too.

Peer Feedback:

I know absolutely zero about this genre. I think you sound great and nice production. The nit I'd pick is that for the length of it, it sounds very similar throughout. I'd enjoy having it change up a bit throughout to see what else you could do.

Hope that helps!

T

Peer Feedback:

Sounds cool Dave.

Peer Feedback:

Hi Tonia, thanks for your comments. This is actually 3 short image sweepers. I just ran them together to demo them. They would normally run out of a commercial break or be dropped between two songs.

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Click to hear John Wang's recording

Hi Everyone, I recently made a new commercial demo reel and was hoping to receive some comments on how it turned out. Thanks in advance! John

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Peer Feedback:

This sounds self-produced.

Your accent is rather distracting in that in the US, an affected accent most likely won't get you a job on most general reads. If you're doing an english read for an asian brand, that'd be a different matter. I'm also hearing some lisping "s" sounds that shouldn't be there. Performance-wise...other than the accent and lisping sound, the inflections aren't bad. This is definitely not ready for prime time for the US market.

Peer Feedback:

I have listened to your animation and video game submissions, and they are quite good.

However, this obviously self-produced commercial demo is, as TxTom stated, "not ready for prime time for the US market."

Aside from the overall less than professional demo quality sound, there are a number of pronunciation problems.

I did a simple Google search and could not find a "Pantitsonic" electric toothbrush. There is a "Panasonic" electric toothbrush. It's important to get the product name right. That is, unless you've made it up - but if that's the case here, it's just too close to the real thing not to be mistaken for a mistaken pronunciation.

Google Wallet - "carrying less" sounded like "caring less". The word was not fully formed.

Abilify - another case of slight in-articulation. "brave face" sounded like "brayface". Even without a glottal separation between the words, it still has to be clear. I don't know what a "brayface" is.

With the diversity of the types of voices used for VO these days, I'm not so bothered by your perceived "accent" as some may be. Just realize that it can be somewhat limiting in the commercial sphere of VO. That said, the words still have to be clearly understood by the broader audience, so the pronunciations and articulations require attention.

There is potential here, but you should seek some coaching and direction as to your articulation, sibilant S's, and have a more studio quality sound for the final product.

Peer Feedback:

I had written a comment while this was still in "Awaiting Feedback" and I ended up deleting it because there was a mild criticism of the accent/diction. That door's been kicked open pretty wide... ;-) The word "with" kind of stuck out for me. Kudos to folks who may speak more than one language and may be going after voiceover in something other than their first language. Not sure that's you but it might be. What I noticed was a very good sense of storytelling and making the copy come alive. I think that was sort of mentioned above in "...the inflections aren't bad..." . I think you do get how to deliver copy. The articulation / accent reduction will likely need to be worked on a bit though.

- touzet -

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for the detailed comments.

I was actually trying to say Patented sonic technology haha. I know that I have an asian accent. I have been working on it every day to try to reduce. I believe my coach's intentions were for me to target the "asian" niche so she had chosen to keep mostly the scripts for asian products and characters commercials.

I'm curious as to what made it sound home made in terms of recording quality. These were actually not produced by me. I had recorded these with my voice coach and she had sent it out to an audio guy to do the rest of the production so if the recording quality sounded that obviously deficient then there is definitely a problem.

Thank you to all of you for your honest feedback, I really appreciate it!

Peer Feedback:

On the plus side. The cuts don't sound like you cut them all at the same time and in the same studio, even if you did.

But the vocal, the actual voiceover, still sounds a bit off, it doesn't enhance your vocal quality. In some cases it just muddies it up some. And the mix with the music often doesn't blend well. The exception is the Google Wallet spot which is better, production wise - it sounds more like you. Others are almost too processed and the volume levels are somewhat erratic from spot to spot. So, my question(s) would be, who produced it? And does this producer actually produce VO as opposed to music production? They're kind of two different animals.

I agree with TxTom and touzet, in that you seem to have a good grasp on how to break down and deliver copy, your animation and video game reads are evidence of that as well. Your concentration may be on improving your diction and articulation for the commercial genre.

Peer Feedback:

The accent was quite good on the "fork on the road" piece. You might consider going for the niche market that is looking for an Asian sound.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you for elaborating James,

I've raised these points with my voice coach and we will be discussing the production quality with the audio guy as well. Thank you all again for your honest opinions, I really appreciate it!

John

Peer Feedback:

John,

I concur with some of the comments, some semblance , music over riding on 1 spot. You definitely have the talent. But like myself need to hone our craft so to speak. In this field of work you can't just be another voice, you need to be unique and have people take notice and listen to what you are saying. Practice, and don't be discouraged. Positive criticism can only point out our weak spots and give us awareness of what to improve upon. Keep it up, you'll be fine!

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This is a compilation of copy I would like to use for my demo. It is in no particular order and i would love suggestion on what may be good first. Recording quality won't be perfect this is on my mac but I have tried to make it less echo-y. performance critiques are more than welcome! Thank you.

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Peer Feedback:

Sounds like you're recording in a gymnasium. What is your recording environment like? What software are you using? Are you using any processing FX? Are you recording directly off your Mac's built in microphone?

I recognized some of the scripts from the Edge Script Library. Even Edge will tell you not to use those scripts for your demo - most are dated and very recognizable in the industry as practice and teaching scripts. Dead giveaway of "amateur" status.

As for performances: Many of them sound the same - same inflections, same dynamic range (pitch), same energy, same pacing, same arc to the copy (story line delivery).

For instance:

The Macy's spot - These are usually big and boisterous - almost pushy and in-you-face. Here, the bottom dropped out at the end.

Applebees - Probably your best spot. Up and perky with lots of smile. But many others sound the same. Macy's (somewhat), V-8, Toyota, Nertrogena. So, we know you can do that. Show us something else.

First Response - It's too big, too much voice. How would you intimately and seriously talk about this with your best girlfriend or sister, say, in a crowded diner where you don't want everyone to hear your conversation?

Are you getting advice from a coach?.

Peer Feedback:

The Applebee's spot was excellent--sounded perfect.

Peer Feedback:

I know it sucks when the comments seem harsh, but I agree with James. The Applebee's is the strongest, so maybe start thinking about matching the selections you choose with your vocal quality. You have a very young, hip sound. Not enough authority to go with a First Response spot ( I'm a mother of 3 and was told I did not sound convincingly like a mom, so I know how that goes) so I'd think through some hip, trendy companies you might have the right voice for. You still want to incorporate different moods and abilities, but you can do that while playing to the strengths of your voice type.

Peer Feedback:

There's something beating up the overall sound pretty badly.My guess is excessive noise reduction. Usually, when there is a constant frequency response issue, it is related to the gear but when it moves around, it seems like it's processing. That's where I am leaning. Don't know if you still have a copy pre-processing but you might consider posting that. I think a little noise would be a far better option.

Peer Feedback:

Really like Applebees, Neutrogena and Werther's the best. Wish you could use the British accent on the "Bond Girls" spot as well as the "Call of Duty" spot, feel like it calls for a British accent somehow, but that's just me :)

Peer Feedback:

wow guys thanks so much! this is incredible feedback!

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Click to hear patrick@plainandsimplevoiceovers.com's recording

The accents and dialects within Huck Finn vary greatly as Mark Twain lists them at the very beginning of the book. I am just concerned if I characterized Huck well or not and if I portrayed him realistically or if the accent is over the top. The demo has already been produced, but I still would love to hear any feedback and critiques any of you may have. I thank you very much for your time in listening to this and for your help! + Patrick

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Peer Feedback:

The pacing is a little brisk. What's your hurry? There are a bunch of words that I either missed or couldn't clearly make out, even after multiple listens. It's important to the language that Mark Twain uses, as it is somewhat foreign sounding (of a different era) to a modern audience.

The characterization seems fine. Not at all over the top.

Have you ever seen Hal Holbrook's one man show "Mark Twain Tonight"? It was done in the '70's. There may be clips on YouTube. It's incredible and the story telling is superb! In places he adopts and portrays the characters of the Huck Finn and Tom Sawyer stories.

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Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

After some GREAT advice on my narration demo, I've reworked it a bit. I don't have the money right now for a completely new demo, so I'd like to see if tweaking it a bit can improve the quality. So, is this any better? I'd love your help my wonderful Edge family!

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Peer Feedback:

DISCLAIMER:

I don't want to contradict anything that a coach has advised you. (I read Carol's comments. She would know better than I.)

For my money, the Drew Barrymore spot is your strongest. I'd lead with that one. It's nice and up and it's you. Nice music selection too.

For contrast, go into he Instructional one. No music and just voice. Smooth, even delivery. Shows you can do more than just perky.

Then bring me down with the Depression spot. Softer and caring.

And then bring me back up with the Nature/Cruise spot. End on a high note.

Just my 2c.

Good stuff though.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much James. I was hoping you would chime in :)

Professional Feedback:

Heather,

Oh, my gosh!!! You DID it! You now have a really usable and wider-ranged demo! KUDOS!

Very impressed,
Carol

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach September 17, 2015 at 4:38PM
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Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

We'll call this a Character Montage. I don't have the time or money for an animation demo yet, so I pieced together a menagerie of characters I've done in books. Thoughts? Things to improve? Thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

I thought there were some characters that could be cut out, that just weren't developed in the snippet you gave, or didn't have the best accents...but there are plenty of fantastic, full characters here. Be more editorial.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks bean-great advice. If anyone has any suggestions off the fly as to which should go first, I'd love to hear. You know how you can hear yourself so much that you lose all perspective? Well, I'm there.

Peer Feedback:

The first one (I don't care for the giggle as a starter and think there are better similarly voiced spots)

the third (the accent isn't as well developed -specifically in the word "spying"),

the one that says "chrissy's handiwork" the copy is confusing, and then asking for a song right before you sing is a little corny, but I liked the song. Of the two, I'd go with your gnome song. Or just cut off the line that asks for the song...

I'd get rid of the giant one, because you sound like you're pushing it a bit, the character is a bit murky, and you say Human Bean -which I'm not sure is an acting choice or not.

I love your bully, I love the last one...there's some really good ones in here, but you have almost five that are UK accents, so be sure to watch those. Characters are more important than accents, and you've laid down some really good ones :)

Peer Feedback:

Awesome. Thanks for that clarification. It is so very helpful!

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

Narration Demo- I am an audiobook narrator who is trying to broaden my horizons. I would love critique, especially things that can be improved next time. Thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

I thought it was excellent, Heather. Copy interpretation and inflection; clarity and enunciation; pacing; and the music tracks and recording quality were great.

Peer Feedback:

It's a really good demo.

Only 2 things really hit my ears as a little odd:

1 - The first sentence. Had to listen to it a few times and still wasn't exactly sure what you actually said - "Want purer eyes?"? I think I need at least the tapped T on "want" instead of the glottal. And if you're asking me if I want "purer eyes", I'm not quite sure what that means. But I only wear eye makeup on stage.

2 - The breath sound in the middle of the "Setting up your Internet Connection" spot. I didn't hear breath sounds anywhere else on the demo and there's no music bed under the spot. That's why it stuck out.

But there is a good variety of spots and styles.

Peer Feedback:

lol it's "killer" eyes, James :) I felt it was a little overly drawn out, that spot.

It could be tweaked here and there, but it's got good variety.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much for the feedback. I actually didn't like that spot, but couldn't put my finger on it. I reworked the demo and dropped that spot and think my demo is stronger for it.

Thanks for your help!

Professional Feedback:

Hi, Heather!

You have a ton of talent and great ability with vocal variety. My very strong impression is that you might do better with a commercial demo. I agree that you could also pursue an animation (and/or character) demo as well. Since you have a stage background and feel you speak in an animated way in real life, it will take training and work to create the "less" from your "more". In training, you'd focus on a more easy, intimate, straightforward read. In narration, you're not selling; you're telling.

The Internet, Depression and Drew Barrymore pieces are the only real narrative sounding choices here. The rest sounds very commercial.

Bullet points of the selections:

Tutorial - less sexy, less commercial
Marshmallow - belongs in a comercial demo
Internet connection - more conversational
Depression - good
Drew Barrymore - needs to be longer
Dating Tips - should be longer and less commercial
Wildlife - much less sexy (especially on the word "really" at 1:25)

I would advise you not to use this demo as is to get work. Instead, I'd take 2 or 3 coaching sessions and then redo it.

Great talent!
All the best,
Carol

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach September 6, 2015 at 5:04PM

Peer Feedback:

Thanks so much Carol,
Great, specific advice which can help me improve. I'm going to rework some things and try again.

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Click to hear vegasfatts's recording

New equipment and I am new to voice overs This was an attempt at a cajun accent Thank you for the time and advice Kenneth R Williams kennethrwilliamsvoiceovers.com

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Peer Feedback:

I like the accent. I can picture a certain type of someone sitting at a picnic table on a river bank. As far as recording quality, it sounds like you're in a bathroom or another place with a lot of echo.

Peer Feedback:

I agree with the sound critiques, and felt you could have REALLY gone even farther with all the double entendres, which are hilarious! Like I was waiting for you to make it feel really awkward and funny, but, in the end, you never really nailed all that fat tail ;)

Peer Feedback:

My dad's family is from Louisiana and I lived in Baton Rouge for a few years. Stopped listening before the first sentence was done. Not close at all.

Peer Feedback:

Kenneth -
I see that you recorded a 15hr audio book on audible.com:
http://www.audible.com/search/ref=a_mn_mt_ano_tseft__galileo/192-6269049...

congrats.
there are other audiobook talents on Edge as well.

cheers!
DS.

PS: you would REALLY benefit from a "quieter" vocal booth.
just google "DIY vocal booth" for ideas. it's very easy to improve the audio quality of your recordings.

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Click to hear tracywoodburn's recording

My second demo. What does everyone think. be critical!

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Peer Feedback:

Hi, Tracy. I like your voice and the recording of it. My two cents on these two demos: they sound just about identical to me; am I just being deaf? The music bed struck me as being just a tad loud compared to the vocal. My biggest beef, though, is that the first three segments have very little to differentiate them, performance-wise; same energy level and vocal inflections throughout. The last segment has a little more energy.

Technically, other than the relative volume levels it sounds very good to my ears.

Peer Feedback:

The first question I would have is: Did you produce both of these Demos yourself?

The second question I would have is: Did you record all of the spots in the same session?

My assumption to the first is that you did. Without seeming to insult your engineering skills, the mix seems a little off between the voice track and the music bed. The voice track is more "present" than the music - with the exception of the last spot, maybe because the rock sound drives a little more.

My assumption to the second is that you did. Because all of the voice tracks sound like they were done on the same microphone, in the same recording environment and using the same processing chain. They are really nice and clean, but exactly the same, auditorially.

As was mentioned by some others, the mood and delivery is also very similar - nearly identical in the first three spots. I wasn't as engaged in the storytelling as much as I was just listening to the same thing (delivery and style) over and over and over again.

Go to VoiceBank.net (click on the "Voice Over Talent Agency" tab) and listen to some narration demos. Won't cost you anything but your time and it's pretty instructive. You'll notice that most have 3-5 various narration styles - up, sincere, mysterious, informative, biographical, flat, etc. And they don't all sound like they've been recorded in the same place at the same time.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you so much for your feedback. I agree with both of you, i actually had these demos professionally produced for me and yes they were all done same time same mic. I am currently having them give me my demos mastered with my voice only to see had that sounds and also having them rearranged a bit to hopefully create a difference between the scripts. I also felt as if the music for most of these bits didn't really pair well.

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Click to hear tracywoodburn's recording

My first demo. Please nit pic everything.

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Peer Feedback:

I agree with psunderwood above...they sound exactly the same, and you need more of an emotional/vocal change up between the first three spots. I'm a bit confused as to what genre this demo is cut for too. I figured narration would have something without b/g music, and the spots and totality are too long for commercial. Is there some niche out there I dunno about you're taking this to?

I also thought the last sound effect, with the hit, it felt a little off to me. I could be nit picking that though ;)

Peer Feedback:

i agree thanks. is there a certain niche i could aim this at or that you think my voice would be better with? and yea it sounds like they threw in a little vocal during one of my tracks not a big fan of that. hopefully with them getting rearranged and with new music they will become better demos.

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Click to hear ScottMcFall's recording

This is my first professional demo coached and produced by Bill Dewees. I'm very excited to have this in my possession now and ready to start auditioning! Just curious what your feedback is on this. Thanks in advance!

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Peer Feedback:

Wow! - @ScottMcFall - I almost feel like I've heard you on regular commercials! I can't think of anything that comes to mind as far as what it's missing or needing! Only thing is, there were a bunch in a row that if I had to manually pause in between (which is not an issue) and like I said, they all sound like they've been on air already!

Peer Feedback:

Quality demo.

Peer Feedback:

My only criticism is that all the vocal levels were the same, oddly so. Really depends on where you plan on shopping it that will make that matter though. Still a nice starter!

Thanks for sharing! I'm a fan of his.

Peer Feedback:

Nice quality sounding demo.

Only criticism I might offer is that there are some Midwestern "regionalisms" that creep in here and there. Examples:

Kraft - "good food da grow up on"
Ford - "git" instead of "get"
Cure Forward - the hard A on "and"
Mountain Dew - "...wit two new flavors..." - I missed the TH on "with"
SquareSpace - "induh" instead of "into"

The rest is really good.

Peer Feedback:

I've been considering avenues for demo recording. This is a pretty strong advertisement for Bill DeWees. And for Scott McFall. Nice job all around!

Peer Feedback:

Great job Scott! Definitely a quality demo as the other guys mentioned.

Peer Feedback:

Wow! This is great. Your work paid off. This will get to the next steps. Congratulations!

Peer Feedback:

I recognize the sound bed from the Kraft spot - Bill used it in his own demo iPad spot

this sounds totally competitive. Great job to the both of you!

DS.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks everyone for the great feedback. I'm very happy with this demo. NOW, on to figuring out my plan for marketing and promoting it.

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Click to hear Thevoicewalker's recording

I have a decent mic but not a very secluded studio area. How does the quality measure up but also does the delivery work as a PSA? Its for bike helmet safety.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi TVW,

You certainly have a prominent resonance in your voice. The volume is somewhat overwhelming, losing the connection to the person who the message is intended for. In voice over, I have learned thus far, that it's how you use the voice to get the message out or what you are trying to convey that's most vital.

Peer Feedback:

Sounds more like a Steven Wright comedy routine than a PSA. Hard to take the message seriously.

Peer Feedback:

Definitely cool voice, lots of character in the sound. But for me the performance doesn't really deliver the message. You have all these short sentences that you say in the same way, would be nicer if you varied a bit to keep the listener's attention and enforce what the script is trying to say.
I think you got the 'relaxed happy' vibe down at the beginning, but you need to wake the listener up when it comes to the IMPORTANT part :)
Recording quality doesn't sound very clear to me, you could probably do with a nicer mic and pre-amp, (doesn't need to cost you more than €400 for something semi-decent).
Edit: sorry I take back any comments about your mic / preamp. I can't really judge properly on the speakers I'm listening on.

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Click to hear Ryan Vollmer's recording

A bunch of different voices I did compiled to one clip. Feel free to share your thoughts and thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

I really enjoyed your many characters! You made me laugh a lot. There were a couple voices that I felt you could have put more of a difference between. By which I mean, a few voices sounded TOO similar.

I thoroughly enjoyed how you created fun and interesting scenarios for your characters instead of just "empty" voices saying things. Awesome job!

Peer Feedback:

Thank you Sgt. Pepper! I really appreciate your feedback and you taking the time to listen. I see (hear) where you are coming from and will try to revise it soon! I appreciate it!

Ryan

Peer Feedback:

Have to agree with Sgt. Pepper. Even though the scripts are from different genres (animation, cartoon, commercial, etc.), many of the voices are too similar for differentiation. Another consideration is whether you want to include so many different genres on one demo, even though they may entail a character voice. Mixing and matching, say, cartoon and animation may be OK. But commercial characters might serve you better on a strictly commercial demo.

Do you give names to your characters? Give them a life and personality all their own? Because making funny or silly voices just for the sake of making funny or silly voices just doesn't cut it in the competitive world of character voices. Those who are successful at it do just that, they create a whole persona for their voices, often to great detail - what they look like (animate or inanimate), what they wear, where they live, what they are called (a name), emotional attributes, etc. Yeah, that's a lot to cram into a 3 second snippet on a demo, but it is perceptible.

I always suggest that people go on VoiceBank.net to listen to demos. Every voice artist who has representation (U.S. and Canada) has their demo there to listen to and download - it doesn't cost a cent. Not all of them are stellar, but most are very slick and professionally done.

Two things that you might also consider.

The slate: Most of the professionals that I have come in contact with (voice talent, agents and casting people) don't care for "cutesie" slates. This one falls into that category. If you listen to the demos on VoiceBank, the majority of them don't even include a slate. And if they do, it's just the name of the artist - no "Hi, I'm..." or "This is SoAndSo and this is my demo" or "...Thanks for listening". If your file is labeled correctly and/or it's on your website, the listener knows who you are.

Unless you have some mad engineering skills, DO NOT SELF-PRODUCE YOUR DEMO. Self-produced demos are fairly evident to voice talent casters and buyers as they listen to hundreds (if not thousands) of demos a week, and believe me they can tell. They may not even get past the first 5 seconds before it gets deleted. One of the giveaways here (other than the slate) is that the music bed. It seems continuous underneath all of the voices. It kind of indicates two things - that you cut all of these in one take or session without giving each voice that "life" that I mentioned above and that several of them sound the same because the "mood" of the music doesn't change.

On the plus side. Your sound quality is pretty good, you're articulate and a few of your voices are fairly distinct and the scripts are pretty good as well.

Peer Feedback:

Thank you James for ripping that apart so much!

I totally needed to hear all of that. Some of which I was aware of, but I love the honest perspective. To address the most important point: “One should not produce their own demo.” I 100% agree and put this together as an example for someone. I never intended on it being considered my real reel…but, it has definitely been my go-to piece until I get a real one done. That was done a few months ago, and I have started seeing a coach that also produces demos, so I am looking forward to that. I will say, that I have heard more than once that no “demo”, is better than a bad one, but have found that in order to build your portfolio of work, it helps a lot to have something to quickly refer to. This has landed me a lot of high quality free work, but yes, I would never expect to land a commericial/professional spot with it. Some important points that I take away from your comments:

- Stick to only character voices
- Slate is not needed (note that I never slate my auditions because it’s in the file name, so it makes sense)
- Focus on character personality/diversity/detail, as opposed to quantity
- If the voice was used in a project, use the projects original backing music/effects

At least you thought the quality of the sound/voice was acceptable! : ) I keep trying to think of ways to continue to improve it, and although I feel like I can tell, it is nice to have that reassured.

Thank you so much for taking the time for your review! I will put it to use!

Ryan Vollmer

Peer Feedback:

great job, love the energy.

Peer Feedback:

Thanks! I appreciate that! - Ryan

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Click to hear Roger1's recording

I was recently offered an opportunity to have a free demo done by a local studio. They wanted to get to know some new voice talent so this was for mostly for their own use both to see how the newbies worked in the studio and to have a demo in their files. scripts were chosen by them. The advantage to me was to show them my stuff, and to get a copy of the demo. Now, I have some ideas about the result, but I would like to get some feedback on it from you folks. Thanks.

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Peer Feedback:

Very, very nice. I hear a bit of mouth noise...

Peer Feedback:

Hi Roger --
it finally dawned on me that this is a demo. You go from 3D printing, then real estate, onto Canadian propane in Nova Scotia, and finally Galaxy Theatres....

your voice is nice. I assume you are Canadian, but to my American ears, I didn't hear any "oots" or "aboots"...so your accent is nicely neutral as well.

and the sound quality seemed pretty good to me.

but, as a demo, all 4 spots sound incredibly identical. The typical intent of a commercial demo is to display your range with clearly demarked, very different spots - to make it easy to the listener to hear the variation. In this demo, I was confused why manufacturing was happening in a nice neighborhood in Nova Scotia....

all that said, very pleasant reads, but consider remixing your demo to make it more competitive.

hoping that helpful,
DS.

Peer Feedback:

Agree with Dave on this.

The last spot has a little more "drive" to it, but the rest of them could have been interchangeable or even mistaken for one long spot - the music, pacing, delivery style and overall mixing are nearly identical. Me hear the Canadian too, not that that's a bad thing.

Sound quality is good.

Professional Feedback:

Hi Roger:
Lucky you to have a free demo produced by a recording studio. However I'm a bit puzzled by their post production results. Some specifics:

While you have a clear , solid and resonant voice and tone, a demo is a way to 'show-off' your voice styles and ranges. The first three tracks sounded like one long file with different copy and music smoothly blending them all together. Not the best for a demo. Your last spot/ Galaxy has enough distinction to your voice; although I'd give it even more energy and punch to your delivery. Also be mindful of the words 'theatre' and 'out' (of this world) as your Canadian regionalisms sneaked in. It also showed up in 2nd spot with expression 'outdoorsy' which sounded more owootdersey to my ear.

Not to knock the regionalism; rather, just have one spot with that voice style expressed full out! and the rest of the spots with your current command of a neutral accent. Going forward, it will be advantageous for both Canadian and Neutral English jobs

Perhaps is there's a way the engineers can alter the music selections for first three so they have some distinction, however I'd ask if you can re-record those selections. In fact re-record the propane spot (with slight Canadian regionalism) and then for your 3-D printing, have a much more Junior Manager stronger air supported voice and a quicker pace to this spot. As for the Rental home spot, really imagine telling ONE person all the features you see and really SEE the when you speak. That will give a whole different tone to your voice; thus four completely different styles and ranges to your demo.

Tech: Sound quality - fine!

Keep up the good work ++

Best,
Marjorie Kouns

Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach June 27, 2015 at 8:51AM
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Demo Recording:

Click to hear lisabeanvo.com's recording

Hi guys! So, thought I'd try something different. This was recorded on my phone, so quality sucks, no need to point it out. I took a bit from my lesson with Nancy (of the Wolfson persuasion) and thought I'd see how that differs from some of the things I'm doing on my own, in your ears. It's really amazing how hard it can be to get the right acting energy at home, self directing! I'm not uploading the script, since it's not mine, and hasn't been altered at all, but am really interested in what you guys hear here. I know it's not perfect, but I'm also trying to not be too hard on myself. HA. Remember, this is the feedback forum, not the listen and silently judge me forum j/k ;) But, seriously, all feedback welcome -I bruise like a peach but I can take a punch.

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Peer Feedback:

For me, the quality of the record is not that big of a deal. I like that you had a good understanding of the material. You can have the best equipment in the world to record with, but if you have no connection to the copy it's a waste. I believed what you were saying, and you did not push the emotion. Good work!

Peer Feedback:

Oh good :) Thanks!

Peer Feedback:

The first time I clicked play, I was reading what the other commenter wrote, so I wasn't listening to the words, and my first thought was, this sounds like a pharmaceutical commercial. I clicked play again, and yup, that is exactly what the script is. So spot on with the feel and tone.

How you say proven seems a bit off, possibly too eager. I think the word emotional needs a bit more emphasis. When you say 'social situations' , the change in pitch on 'situations' seems a bit jagged. The intonation and emphasis on everything else is quite good. I can really feel that you are pretending to care.

It could very well be due to the poor frequency response of the microphone, but it sounds like it could use a bit more ... fullness I suppose, on the lower end notes.

Despite listing several things to possibly tighten up, it was quite good. Also, many of the things I listed could very well be due to the recording quality. Which is a good sign, as that means the suggestions are at the nuance level.

Peer Feedback:

Appreciated mucho!

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Click to hear BJPetersen08's recording

This demo has been tweeked several times by multiple people. This is the end result and I'm very happy with it. I hope you are too. If not, don't hold back I can take harsh critiques.

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Peer Feedback:

The first thing that jumped out at me was the prevalence of a "lisp-y" "s" sound in spots through the demo. It tends to make me wonder if all the reads were done at the same mic in the exact same position and if there's an issue with the processing...or if there is actually a lisp that needs to be addressed.

The second thing that jumped out with gusto is the extreme processing that's done to the vocals. Due to the amount of b/g f/x I cannot always hear if the same processing is being applied to every sample. But I'm hearing a LOT of echo and a LOT of compression which is not representative of the average advertising reads today. This sounds like someone who has a radio background trying to bring that to the market now. It might get a few local radio spots where the over-done processing still gets some work...but it's brutally harsh to the ears.

Did you do this in your home studio? That's the impression I get from the sound.

Peer Feedback:

The same "lispy-ness" struck me as well.

I went back and listened to some of your other recordings - especially the first demo you submitted - and didn't hear that in those recordings. So, I'm thinking that it is sonic artifact in the processing.

The individual spots work well and the total demo is a good length.

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I don't have a lisp so I think it might be an issue with the processing. However, I did go back and listen to the raw recordings for the demo and think the "s" sounds are a little lazy (if that makes sense?). Is the lispy-ness something that can be eliminated with processing or do I need to rerecord? Perhaps both? Either way, I'll be rerecording this demo with a newly upgraded home studio to get a better sound quality. Any and all direction you can give is very much appreciated as always. 1) I need to change up my mic position and/or use multiple mics. 2) I need to be aware of my "s" sound and find a proper middle ground between over enunciating and lazy.

Thanks for your help.

Peer Feedback:

Sounds good, but would be better with about 20db less of the high end. Maybe too much of an exciter type plugin?

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Click to hear Sandra Parker's recording

This is a professionally mixed demo, part of 9 different scripts. Honest feedback would be great! Sandra

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Peer Feedback:

You sound fabulous. Love the phrasing, the tempo, the acting choices. Music seemed to support it very well and I really was able to focus on you.

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Sandra,

Like your voice, and the MB IS great too. However, I would think you would phrase the 1st line "What would YOU give for perfect skin" as a question than a statement. Leading the listener to more curiosity? Good read .

Peer Feedback:

Disagree with marysboy1 on punching "you" in the first sentence. I already know that you're talking to me, no need to hammer it home. However that ever-so-slight pause after "up" kind of breaks up the complete question for me. I would have preferred driving the sentence to the question mark. (Perhaps somewhat coyly and with a smile. But that might not be totally appropriate for a woman listening as a man. Or is that being sexist? Nancy Wolfson has things to say about these kind of commercials where chicks are appealing to chicks instead of appealing to guys. Her words, not mine.)

IMHO, it's a nice spot and fits your voice very well and the attitude is spot on, but at 17 seconds, it may be a tad too long a cut for a demo. A re-write may be: "With Visionaire Blurr from Lancome Paris, that's all it takes...healthy glow" Then you can eliminate the tag because you've covered it. That, and tightening up the initial question might give you 2 or 3 seconds to use for another cut, maybe a simple tag. Remember, the spots on the demo don't have to be complete spots. Just my 2c.

Peer Feedback:

I think the pause is ok, it's the upward inflection that makes it sound like the question ends at "up", especially when you go down for "skin" The tease is still totally acceptable woman to woman. It's about a genuine "you know you've sacrificed so much already so what would you sacrifice for this? Well guess, you don't have to give up anything (other than you're money)"

So I think that pause could totally work there, just put the tease on perfect skin, not up. The tease is in the pause, the trap snaps with "perfect skin"

I also agree it should be shorter. With so many demos clocking in at under a minute, you're really eating up a lot of time displaying your talents on this one spot. With nine others, you won't have much time. If you're just looking for a section off of this recording, I'd take secs 7-14. But that really depends on your other spots.

Peer Feedback:

Short and Sweet. I am LOVING your sound. I can't wait to hear more.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear christinerage's recording

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Peer Feedback:

Sounds very slick and good quality - bravo!

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Your levels are way too "hot". There's a lot of distortion because the initial recording (before any processing) was probably pegging into the red (clipping). However, even the finished product is way too loud. Peak volume level came in at something close to +5.36dB, almost 9 times louder than is normal for a comfortable VO listening level (somewhere between -12dB to -3dB). Which indicates to me that this is either home grown or done in a music production facility and not one so much familiar with strictly producing voice over. There's a big difference.

I had to turn the gain way, way down to comfortably listen to this through my headphones. It was a bit deafening.

#1 - "...shave gel." sounds like a question and not an extension of the product. Quite a bit of mouth noise, especially at the end.
#2 - You used a little of the "fry" voice on the first cut as well. Want to be careful not to overdo it.
#3 - Nice contrast with the sultry attitude and delivery. But I missed the name of the Cafe because of a big plosive pop on a B sound and the sax covered it up.
#4 - Really poppy. and I could tell by looking at the wave form that it clipped all over the place - way, way too hot.
#5 - At 37 seconds, it's much too long of a cut for a demo. Not sure that the attitude fits the copy either. Feel like you're shouting at me.

You have a pleasant and articulate voice. And you seem pretty versatile. Did you work with a coach to produce this?

It's a good attempt, but not very marketable. If only for the single reason that it is too loud. Imagine that you are an agent or casting person or even a client listening to a succession of demos back to back to back in one sitting. If the majority of them are normalized to, say, an average of -6dB (a comfortable listening level) and yours blares out at +5.36dB (27 times that level, because decibels increase exponentially), it'll get noticed, just not for the reasons that you may have intended. And it will get deleted within the first 5 seconds, 'cuz that's about how long it takes to find the delete key on the keyboard..

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear maxbentley94's recording

Hey friends After reviewing a great deal of comments and critiques from my previous demo concept, I have created a new demo that I think is much more effective. Please let me know what your thoughts are. Thanks for your feedback!

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Peer Feedback:

Max,

I never listened to any of your previous posts so can't compare, but this is great!

The third cut I think gets a little long and boring, but no big deal.

You managed to do the two hardest things for me, in a demo very well. You got my attention right away (boy did you!), and you showed a variety of styles so it just wasn't more of the same thing.

The very last cut is a little bland (and mouth clicky) for being the last one maybe, but I am still sitting here thinking about your opening and that's the idea - make it memorable.

Peer Feedback:

Hi Max,

Great demo! Your vocals are good, timing is good also. I would center on your talent (voice), rather then all the production, but is done well too.

Peer Feedback:

As a "demo," this would probably not do so well for the vocal talent. For the producer of the file, it would fare better as demonstrating a myriad of genres handled within the same 47s clip. As a vocal talent demo, it'd probably fail.

The reason I say this is that a demo needs to show your strengths within a genre or genres ...but multiple demos would be produced to show multiple genres. What you've done here is show a clip each of different genres. You might argue "but that shows flexibility!" Weak point. Reason being that most of us can play around with different genres and maybe get a really nice one amongst a pile of garbage in the other attempts. To cull a single "nice one" from said pile of garbage might seem a good idea...but it doesn't demonstrate a CONSISTENCY that a genre specific demo with multiple samples of the same genre would do. Producers and talent agents are fully aware of this. They'll hear a thing like this and think that you've done just what I described above. OR they'll simply write you off as amateur because professionals know to make proper demos.

So if you are trying to demonstrate that you have multi-genre talents...you'll really need to concentrate of producing a demo for each of those genres. This is why it's advantageous to have a website with each demo presented separately as "commercial" and "promo" and "narration" and on.

It's very important to not put a bad impression out there. It can take a long long time to overcome a bad initial impression created by a demo that doesn't impress.

*end of soapbox speech*

Peer Feedback:

I love the intro, it woke me up and is very attention getting. Nice job in the demo the whole thing sound very professionally produced

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Great job! The opening was great; I think it'll wake up anyone who has been listening to a bunch prior to yours. You seem to have good command of emotional intent, which is great too. Solid job. All the best!

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear petertahoe's recording

I know it needs more spots, but thoughts on these two?

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Peer Feedback:

I thought the MB was a little high on the first one, as well as being a little long. You can stop after "together" You didn't hit the tag so amazingly that you need to leave all that empty music space in there.

I thought you were a little fast in the opening of the second spot, but it was a great second spot to go to for vocal placement and acting differentiation.

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hi Pete,

Like your sound. MB a little strong to distract from voice and read , other wise good.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear maxbentley94's recording

Hey friends! This is a potential demo I've been working on -- all recorded from my home studio. What are your thoughts? Thanks for your feedback Max

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Peer Feedback:

Every sample sounds the same i.e. tone/delivery/content. I hear an announcer behind the mic and very generic production qualities. "Lorem ipsum" will peg you as doing non-professional content. You'll need to show more creativity than using that.

You absolutely need to show more flexibility/variety than what is evident in this sample. You'll also want to practice a more conversational/non-announcer sound in that variety I mention.

Your sound has good quality, but the delivery could get some work, but if you work at varying your product, you might get more work. It's pretty cliché announcer in this post. If that's your goal...you're really close. But if you really seek the most work you can get...you'll need to work on variety a lot more.

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Thanks for your feedback! This is the first reel I've put together. What I was trying to do is make a different reels based on style. Do you think this is counterproductive?

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I'm kind of with TxTom on this. The spots are of various subject matter, but the delivery (in volume, inflection, pitch range, rhythm and tone) are for the most part fairly much the same.

The production also sounds like it was done in one sitting or session. Same levels, same settings, same mix. Of course a demo is a demo, but one of Edge's philosophies in demo production is to vary the production quality in subtle ways as no two studios or sessions (even in the same studio) sound quite the same. Pros and cons to that. But the bottom line is that this may smack a little as "self produced" (even though the sound quality is really quite good) to an experienced listener (casting person, agent, director/engineer and/or client). The other point is that, if you are going to do it this way (which is not recommended, but you seem to be able to produce a really clean recording, so why not?), that you have at least a second set of critical ears to tweak the direction to keep you from getting "locked in" to the same dynamics for all the reads.

The spots:

1. Vital - IMHO, it's too long. You can get to the point and product in half the time.
You could cut from "...world view." and go directly into "That's why we created Vital." Yeah, that middle stuff is important, but it's also important (with a demo) to get to the point and move on. It would also leave you room for another short cut.

2. Dog Sit - It's interesting that the first spot starts with "roll over" and the second one starts with other dog training commands "beg" and "sit" (kinda). But all of the characteristics of the spot are virtually the same as the first one - tone, inflection, energy, pacing, vocal range and volume. The length is pretty good. Some of the words are "punched" quite hard ("beg"), maybe forcing the joke a bit. You might consider a barking/panting FX to "cuten" it up some.

3. Farming w/Friends - You brought the tone down a bit. The accent on the word "RE-view" sounded a bit odd to my ear. "reh-VIEW" seems somewhat more appropriate. Could be a regionalism. But, again, the other dynamics are very similar the the previous 2 spots.

4. North Georgia - Short and sweet. And the smile is there. But it sounds more "bad boy" conspiratorial than an intriguing question about North Georgia as a learning institution. Is the selling point that it's a party school?

All of the spots are kind of high-energy, which is what you do well (even if it is a touch announcery at times). For contrast and range, you might consider throwing in something a little more "grounded" like a snippet of a serious PSA or a personal "friendly advice giving" sort of thing, possibly in the second slot.

Peer Feedback:

Tom gave you great advice. The first clip was too long and ran on. The mic matches you well. I'm not sure if you are trying to make different demos and each demo is a particular type of singular character (based on your reply to Tom), and if thats the case .... DON'T. No one has time for that. Several samples of variations in timing, pitch, tone, etc.

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I like the smooth, easy speed you achieved. Nice sound quality and music.

1. Nice distinct vibe to this but goes too long. It's not traveling at all in tone or emotion, so I think it has to be a lot shorter. If you're reluctant to cut up the text (it does flow logically), perhaps consider editing to tighter and still have it stay cohesive.
2. Very similar voice but a little more opinion. I like this spot a little better than the first but I think the first is a very timely topic.
3. A little deeper tone. Nice transition. "REview?" "Epic agriculture game" wasn't as clear as it could be. If I were directing, I'd ask you to take some of the singsong out of the second half and flatten it a touch to see how I liked it
4. I caught the bad boy thing there, too, and liked it if it's appropriate, and I can imagine a university creating multiple adds for different demographic audiences (party one for the kids, serious one for the parents.)

Gotta dash and pick up my daughter, so super short crit for the rest, but I want to hear you in a flatter documentary style, and maybe something very straightforward and industrial. Hope this helps! You have a really nice sound and this is a great start.

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I'd like to thank everyone for your notes. I've taken all of your comments to heart and I will work extensively to refine my demo and make it as perfect as I can.

I plan to cut down and keep the vital read, replace spot #2 with a friendly/not-so-high energy read, and spot #3 with a more serious read.

I'll also make sure no two recordings sound exactly alike!

Thanks again -
Max

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This is very well produced and you have a great voice, however I think you need to showcase more variety/dynamics in your reads, each one is too similar in my opinion.

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear psjones's recording

Potential Demo, displaying just some of the characters that reside in me.

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Peer Feedback:

I would say that you hammed it up pretty good!

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Nicely done with the voices! I would probably recommend selecting 7-8 of the best and easiest to do and work some content for them. You don't need them all, and some sounded very similar anyways. Quality over quantity.

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Thanks TotalMix....... I tried to fit in as many voices in 60 sec and still keep each voice clear and distinct. I took the challenge after hearing a famous VO actor's character demo in which he did about 17-18 in just under a minute (have to admit as good as he is, some sounded similar). But I like your suggestion, 7-8 in a minute with more dialogue. With so many voices it's a challenge not to have some sound similar.

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The important thing to remember is that CD's are looking for distinct voices. If your voices sound similar it shows a limited range, however putting an accent (German etc) eliminates that which you did as well. The problem is, if your voices sound similar to someone else they have already worked with in studio, they'll call them since they already have a working relationship. Add some growl, shouts, yelling, singing. Those are all things that will be asked of you in the booth whether you are ready for it or not, your on the spot. show them you can do it. That where you have the advantage in your demo over most out there.

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PSJ,

I like your versatility! You obviously have a niche for character voices, I would pick 5 distinct voices that you're good at and use them. Nice job!

Peer Feedback:

Thanks marysboy, love doing character voices and doing fewer would be less taxing and less chance of voices being too similar.

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This is the very first demo I created and I'd love some peer feedback. Will get pro feedback soon, too.

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Peer Feedback:

When you say "demo", do you mean in terms of an actual commercial demo or just something representative of what you would like to include on a commercial demo? Big difference.

The voice track sounds clear and clean - as in no obvious background noise or echo. But it also sounds like it was recorded too "hot" or did not normalized to at least -3dB peak volume. I had to turn my computer's volume way down for a comfortable listening level through my headphones.

There is quite a bit of plosive popping. Even if you are using a pop screen, they aren't 100% effective. You might consider going a little off-axis to the mic as well. That way the puffs of air go past the mic instead of directly into the diaphragm.

The delivery is nice. Maybe just a touch more joy (substitute "smile") in the voice would have really brought it home. Who are you addressing? Are you picturing these activities, sounds and smiling faces in your mind?

The timing is about right. You might consider a fade out on the music bed - it cuts off rather abruptly.

Peer Feedback:

Parts of the delivery seemed forced. The pacing was off too and the voice pattern did not match the subject too well. As a listener I was not able to hear an emotional connection with the words and spirit of the subject.

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I'm working on creating a variety voices that I want to be usable for my demo. What do you think?

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Peer Feedback:

Nice cast of voices, all very distinctive and well separated characters. The opening phrase is probably the weakest so I would suggest changing the sample if using for auditions. The last phrase would be my opener unless that's the end of the conversation. This is a good sample that showcases your range but the opening phrase sounds a little strained, outside your comfort zone. Would suggest starting demo after that phrase or pick another block of text that starts with one of the characters.

Peer Feedback:

A few observations:

Characters 1, 3 & 6 are very similar - to the point that they could be the same person only in a slightly different situation or emotional state.

The same thing with characters 2 & 5.

4, 7, 8 & 9 are a bit more differentiated and deliniated.

Generally, there is a lack of energy or a "going for it" kind of feel to all of the voices - most lack a kind of "punch" you'd need for video games or cartoons. Let yourself go crazy. A director can always pull you back, but pulling you forward is like pulling teeth for a director.

You might consider starting with something closer to your natural voice - like #8 - and then flip-flop back and forth with some extreme voices to show versatility.

A good number of the scripts are in the same vain - really kind of downers, made even more so by the lack of general energy in the delivery. The comic ones (2 & 4) fell kind of flat - Again, pushing the character's energy to level 8 or 9 might give it a little more 'umph", these were about a 3. But don't confuse "energy" with "volume" - even a whisper can have energy and intensity.

Do you have names for your characters? And/or an image in your mind of what they might look like? Have you given them a life? A history? A specific quirk? Their own intelligence level? Are some of them even human? Might one have some kind of accent (even if the language is not of this earth)?

Creating characters is more than just making funny or strange sounding voices. Some great actors always play themselves in the roles they perform, others transform themselves and "inhabit" the characters they play. Creating character voices are more the latter than the former.

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Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

I am trying to see if I can get away with recording my own audiobook demo. I am using a TLM 103 in my studio, with Twisted Wave, on a mac and a Steinberg UR12 interface. I had too much sibilance on my first try, so reduced that, and am loading it again.

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Peer Feedback:

Hi Heather,

It sounds like you put a lot of effort into this demo. I would possibly leave out the last cut, and stay with the adult stories. I'm not by any means an expert, just my humble opinion. I have a lot of clients who use audio books, so I hear a lot of different voices.

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Great!. The sound quality I thought was demo ready.

I am not sure what the first piece is actually. It has no dialogue between characters and it doesn't seem to be non-fiction, so I don't know it should be in a demo. Either the second or third script here (I think the third has more general applicability) I would use as the male/female dialogue example. You do the dialogue very well, but there is really no need for more than one unless you are perhaps trying to show a particular foreign accent or something like that in one of them.

According to my Edge Audiobook coach the other two samples should be a non-fiction (like a history or biography) and a specialty niche title (something perhaps like a self help, of even a spiritual item).

I am also working on my audiobook demo. I found the niche sample the hardest to find and settled on a book about growing cactus.

Peer Feedback:

You seem to have tackled the sibilance problem that TxTom alluded to. This recording is much easier on the ears than the previous one.

I also have to somewhat agree with him about the introduction. I understand Pat Fraley's take on it - if it's Pat who is introducing you. But this voice is obviously not Pat and (forgive me whoever you are) rather dull and bored sounding. Not sure that that is the first impression you want to lead in with a demo. Only my 2c.

A lot of times we can get caught up in this or that method. Some will say more variety, some will say capitalize on your strengths, and still others will say go with what appeals to you. You've obviously put much time,effort and thought (and expense) into this presentation. So, if nonfiction is not your thing and/or if you don't see yourself pursuing it as much as romance or regular fiction or kiddie books, then skip it.

What I can tell from this sampling is this:

You have a very pleasant and enjoyably listenable voice - articulate and balanced.
You are a good storyteller with good pacing.
You handle dialogue very well with good characterizations and delineation.
You read very well and make sense of the story.
Nothing sounds "forced" or "overdone".
There's a understanding of the subtle (and not so subtle) differences in different types of fiction.
The sound quality is very good.
You have skills as a voice actor. (You've studied acting, haven't you. That's why I used that term rather than voiceover artist.) As well as a sound engineer.

So, the bottom line is: If a particular publisher or rights holder is looking for a young female voice for their particular project, you would certainly fit the bill and would be under consideration - and possibly book the job. A lot of that is subjective, but IMHO this is a very good representative demo of your abilities, tastes and strengths and it is potentially very competitive.

Run with it.

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tech stuff:

I don't mind the male voice, but there's echo in his intro which tweaked me right away.

1st piece
There's a clicking I'm hearing in the audio as if you've put in some kind of noise filter and sporadic bits of mouth noise (or SOMETHING) is getting through. Spots with examples of this (and I'm listening on headphones in a very quiet booth, so this is getting picky).
heart hurt to imagine it
countdown to new year began
five

2nd piece
Nice voices.

3rd piece
First speaker attribution sticks out to me.
I found myself catching up a couple times as to who was speaking--narrator, female, male... Seemed a little flat to me, acting-wise.

4th piece: Fun! Nice work. I'd save it for a children's audiobook demo, though, and focus hard on the adult fiction.

So let's see, you have:
1. 1st-person POV, reflective, wistful tone
2. 3rd-person POV with multiple gender/ages voices Upbeat.
3. 1st person POV with back-and-forth between hero and heroine
4. Children's piece.

I might shoot for all adult fiction, and I think it would be good to have more back and forth between an adult man and woman to prove you can do it to a producer. Also, it would be good to get in spot that has more urgency/rising tension/or dramatic climax in it. I'd save the children's piece for another demo, and I'd do that for non-fiction, too. These would all work nicely for separate spots on ACX, I would think. Careful not to come off as strident or airy by having too many higher pitched women's/girl voice in your demo stable. Your natural voice is VERY nice (jealous!) and I'd stick close to that and let the guy voices dip a little and not stray too far high.

Okay, and this critique is sooo focused on negative, but I'm supposed to be monitoring a playdate of 5-year-olds and James hit on the positive already, all of which I agree with. I agree that you should be working if you're not already.

Hope this helps! See what rings true for you and ditch the rest. :)

Tonia

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Thank you all for the amazing critiques. I am so thankful for this crowd! Thank you for helping me get more focused on the details of what I put in my demo, and why.
Tom, thanks for sharing your tips on genre and such. I'll be thinking that over.

James, your input was invaluable, as always. Your comment about the male voice
made me laugh, because it's my husband who was coerced, and definitely not a VO. I'll definitely be changing that. Thanks for all the encouraging words.

Tonia, thank you for being picky. I want that. I use Izotope RX and sometimes there are artifacts from it, so I'll have to listen to those spots. Also thanks for the in-depth ideas on how to make the demo better. They were wonderful and I will definitely benefit from your advice!

You guys are great. Thank you so much!

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Interesting. I didn't read Tom's comments until now and see what he said re: audiobook demo and which genres to represent. My comments were based on some coaching from Robin Miles, who was steering me towards separate demos for non-fiction and fiction. Anyway, just wanted to pipe up with the "why" from my end. I suspect it's all VERY fluid right now and bet there are multiple right answers in the industry, but I've been out of the loop for a while...

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Demo Recording:

Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

I am getting a professional narration demo done, but was hoping I might be able to swing doing an audiobook demo on my own. Thoughts?

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Sorry, for some reason, the last four words got cut out

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A couple of points: don't have another voice do your intro...that was something akin to "she couldn't be trusted to do this"....and the question of doing your own audiobook demo might be as simple as the reality of whether you are reading in your own studio/space or if what we're hearing her is done where you're going to read every time. this sample is kinda hot in the upper range (sibilant or sizzle-y) but if this isn't your regular situation, that quesiton can not be answered by what you've put on the forum thus far.

Nice voice, btw. Nice technique as well. but to your question...too many variables to be able to answered that simple question.

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Wow! Thank you so much Tx Tom. It's amazing I didn't notice the sibilance. I use TLM 103 in my own space, so I'm going to play with it tomorrow and see about tilting it a bit more. As for this recording, I used izotope's spectral repair to reduce the sibilance and I think it helped quite a bit. I will repost the new clip above.

As to having someone introduce me, I actually don't like that either, but found a bunch of pro coaches (like Pat Fraley) who said that's how you should do it. I would be curious to see what others think also...

Thanks again!

Peer Feedback:

I see from your next submission on the forum that you're using a Steinberg UR12 with a TLM-103. Very same setup I'm using. While the 103 is a pretty smooth mic on the upper end, it can still sizzle if you address it wrong. I've found that moving it 45º off axis and above my mouth...maybe 4 to 6" higher than my mouth cuts back on the sizzle for me. But then again, your next read was less sharp than this one.

Peer Feedback:

nice setup :) I love my mic, but did adjust it thanks to your suggestion and I think it helped.

Thanks Tom!

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Click to hear saragalassini's recording

I want to get voice over jobs, this is a recording for an audiobook. I would like to find out what is missing in this recording and what needs to be improved. Voice control, English pronunciation etc.?

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Peer Feedback:

I loved it! Your English pronunciation was excellent!

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Do you listen to audiobooks? If you do, when was the last time you heard one with so much reverb? The answer is rarely, if ever. It's just not done as a matter of course.

It also sounds like there is a machine running in the background - a short of chugging noise.

I can't quite pinpoint the accent, but your English is very good, as are your pronunciations. However, the accent is quite evident which may be a limiting factor. Conversely, it could be exploited as an asset.

Peer Feedback:

Well, I'm going to disagree with tonywells82 that your pronunciations were excellent because your delivery has a distinct "non-neutral-american" delivery. That's not necessarily bad. But it does mean that you can't (with this delivery) do a non-affected neutral read. Not knowing your location or exact native dialect, I can't zero in on what might work for you. But I CAN say that you have a nice clear delivery. You do have a habit of over doing the diction in this one...it might be because you're trying to get some commentary on your english delivery.

I, at this point, would ask what your first language might be. If you don't want to say, that's fine...but I ask so that I might be able to offer some input on how to work with the tools you have at hand.

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Click to hear ashleyonair@gmail.com's recording

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Slow it down about 10 percent, and it sounds like you were cut off at the very end.

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Ashley, Great sound, need to slow down , but keep the excitement! good job.

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Sounds like half of a commercial demo.

Not sure that "slowing down" is what is actually what's needed here so much as a little variation of pace, pitch, intonation, vocal quality and intention from spot to spot to spot. If these were the first 4 spots on your demo, they all started out relatively the same - the first few syllables, a pause and then continuing on. They are all also in the same relative dynamic pitch range and volume, so even with the different processing, it could (if one wasn't listening closely to the actual words) be mistaken for one long run-on spot.

Sounds like you come from a broadcast radio background.

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Your demo sounds really polished. I agree with James that the engineer might've put a little more variation up front.
having said that, you have professional sound.

cheers,
DS.

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Very professional sounding indeed. I found the music a tad too loud however. Agree with others on speed of delivery, too frantic but not drastically so. Minor tweaks, overall well done.

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Slow down and punctuate the copy when you read.

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Click to hear nozmoking's recording

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Like the sound of your voice. Slow your pace down, it sounded as though you were rushing through the copy. Which makes it sound as though you are not connected to what you are saying. Good job!

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The copy was a little fast, and the music level sort of drowned you out, other wise good job.

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Music was drowning you out , needed some inflection. Overall very flat.

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Music was nice and appropriate but maybe too loud, otherwise great job.

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Your voice is a winner, agree with most of other comments, pace was too fast, could use a little more emotion and music a tad too loud. Great potential, just a few "tweaks" are needed.

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Click to hear Roger1's recording

I am working towards my narration demo, and I have 6 scripts that I have chosen. The first two are going to stay, but I need to pick 2 from the remaining 4 (one "dark, one "light") in order to keep it under a minute. Any suggestions? Also any comments on performance and recording quality would be greatly appreciated.

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Your recording quality is very good. Technical recording clear.

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I hear disturbance in your voice possibly from too much noise removal or eq. I would suggest having a professional demo made because your demo is your calling card. It is what shows casting directors what you can do. If I can notice what sounds too edited, well, it will make a casting director delete your demo immediately. Your voice is great let your demo demonstrate that. Professional demos can be expensive, but the return will pay for the cost quickly.

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I agree with Hubert,

It would be very evident that this is an amateur made demo reel when all the recordings sound exactly the same. Also, your delivery is pretty similar between all the scripts. Many coaches will offer to help you make your demo while coaching you through your delivery so I think that would benefit you.

Good luck!

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Thanks guys. I should have pointed out that this is just a practice take, and I will be getting a professional demo done as you suggest, with a coach to direct. I was more looking for advice on which four to include on my demo and input on the sound quality.

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Hi Roger,

As this is pre-direction and as I mentioned, the spots all sound fairly similar. I think I enjoy your voice in the more conversational/humorous scripts over the hard narration ones. it is hard for me to say which one would work best. I believe this would be a good question to ask your voice coach as he/she would likely just ask you to record all 6 and probably 6 other ones that they would recommend to you and pick the best ones from there. When I did mine, We came up with 16 different ones and used 10 or something for a 1 minute demo.

Cheers!

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Click to hear richardgreen98's recording

I've had some quality issues which I think I have eliminated thro getting away from a USB mic, and a Scarlett 2i2 interface. I am getting booked but I'd appreciate the opinion of someone "in the know" as to whether I should go further ? I am hoping to attend the Edge Road show when it comes to Philly for some more feedback.

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Quality of your recording sounds really good. I think you need to slow down , I think you have the right ideas you are trying to convey but with your accent being thick at the speed you are reading the copy its really hard to understand. Hope this helps .

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I could hear quite a bit of hiss in the background, but there were places, perhaps at edits, where it stopped for a nanosecond. After the word "with" at 14 sec in for example. I agree with TerrysVoice that you need to slow down to make sure we can understand you. You need to give us more time to savour your nice tone and accent.

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Quality recording good. Your voiceover was very specific and possibly limiting. There's no doubt you have talent, but can your voice carry range.

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Thanks for the comments guys,

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Richard, great quality on recording, read is a little too fast, otherwise good job!

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Thanks again, I uploaded an earlier version of this and I totally agree that it's too fast a read. This is the one I should have used: https://www.voices.com/demo_detail/162054
Funny thing is , I was rejected by www.voiceoverexpress.com for this demo, saying there was too much hiss and the overall quality wasn't up to their standard.. I have certainly produced worse than this (non-intentionally) and have always been well paid, I don't get it... I am thinking of building a custom booth, as opposed to the desktop set up I have now, but I'm not sure I can improve that much. Maybe, they were being nice and simply didn't like the voice...

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Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

This is one of the samples I have uploaded to my acx profile. I would love feedback, and if interested, I'd even love feedback on my acx profile and samples. If it sucks, I'd rather hear it here, than waste time auditioning. https://www.acx.com/narrator?p=A18HLEXNPJCQVW#elementId=creditsTabItem&tabDivId=creditsTabContent I feel like no one will want to take a chance on me since I have no credits. Should I do a few Royalty Shares just to get some experience first?

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At first the acent was so thick I couldn't understand it, but as it went on you slowed down and it sounded much better. The sound quality is excellent. I found it to be nice and clear. Easy to listen to.

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I have no trouble with the accent, it is who you are. What concerns me is the sing-songy-ness of the narrator and the (nearly) over-stressing of everything.

Plus, you could dial it back a bit - acting and volume wise.

I will repeat two things that I hear constantly in the audiobook workshops I attend at the SAG Foundation VO Lab in NYC.

-"Gimme less voice." - talk as if you are 6 inches from the listener's ear.
-"If EVERYTHING is important, than nothing's important." Let the words tell the story. If it's well written, there's not much need for embellishment and/or stressing every little point.

The breath sounds need to be there, but some are a bit loud. De-breather plugins are only so effective, so don't count on them to do the trick. It's a tedious business, but I isolate my breath sounds and drop them by about 15dB - they're still there and noticeable at a comfortable listening experience, but (hopefully) they are not obtrusive or distracting.

There is also quite a bit of mouth noise - most of it is "in the clear" and could be eliminated with a little surgical editing. Another tedious process. Again, do not count on declicker or decrackler plugins to take care of them.

I did not analyze the file, but the noise floor seems to be fine for ACX's standards, which is around -60dB. The sound quality is generally very good.

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Thanks so much to you both. Perhaps I should have mentioned that this is a book for kids 8-12. That is why it is dialed up a bit. Does that change anything James, or is it still too much?

I like the idea of cutting the breaths down to -15. I will definitely try that.
Thanks again!
Heather

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The judgement call for children's books is the line between sounding enthusiastic and condescending. Kids know the difference. Making everything soooooo important pushes the envelope towards the latter, IMHO. I would imagine that the "gimme less voice" may still apply though - especially with the narrator, save the increase in volume and inflections for the characters and let them come alive. Think about telling the story to a child sitting on your lap, not across the room.

Here's an experience I had with a "first 15 minute" sample I submitted for a book I did on ACX:

Rather than doing the tedious job of isolating my breaths and dropping them 15dB, I thought I'd save myself some editing time with a (fairly expensive and very popular) de-breath plugin. I set the parameters very, very carefully. It caught some and missed others. But I thought it might pass. It didn't. The rights holder kicked it back, specifically stating that the breaths were too loud. I went back to my old method (on the exact same file), resubmitted it and the rights holder told me that it was perfect. The moral? I don't trust plugins as much as I trust my editing skills and judgement.

BTW - I went to your profile page on ACX. You should add a PFH (I would recommend $200 - $400 whether you feel that bold or not) along with Royalty Share. It shows a certain professionalism and confidence in your ability, You won't scare people away with it.

Also, take some time and listen to your competition. Search for other narrators and listen to their samples. You can learn just as much from the bad as from the good, and you'll instantly know the difference.

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I think you are absolutely right about the narrator. I suppose I gave her a "Mary Poppins" type character, when that really isn't called for. Thank you for bringing that to my attention. I will revise the selection.
Also thanks for letting me learn from your "de-breathing" mistakes rather than investing money in a plug-in and making the same mistake. I am starting to get the hang of editing, and just incorporated the breath reduction on an audition today. Before, I would just edit them out, but I was struggling with over editing, so this option is much better.

I don't think I have the guts to set myself in the 200-400 range until I've had a little experience, but I did change my profile to 100-200, so that's a step :)

As always, your advice is invaluable.
Thank you,
Heather

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Don't sell yourself short. The read was good enough to draw someone into your prices. The breathing noises were the only part that was a bit distracting, but not enough to diminish the enjoyment of the piece. Suck!. No, not at all.

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Click to hear hankradio's recording

I haven't been on the FF for awhile, been trying to kick things up to a new level...hope everybody is doing great! My website is nearly complete and I've been having different genre demos put together...here's the character demo. Some of the traditional rules have been broken, like background music and the length of the demo, but other than that I'd like to know your thoughts on the range of characters and if it displays enough variety. Thank you and cheers!

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Man the quality of sound is great and I dig the voices alot. I know no music is the rule but I kinof like it. Great Job.

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Nice bunch of characters. There were a few that seemed to be very similar though. The one with the "young master" line which I assume continues on into "The Architect" line; the "Blackheart" one: and the "Inquisitor" one all sound very similar. A flavoring of one may be enough for that pitch, tone and intensity level. Some of them (the scripts) may also be a little too long. All of the ones mentioned above are examples. The "Darkheart" also goes on a bit.

I haven't done a character reel yet, so I'm not exactly sure. But from the ones I've heard on VoiceBank.net, the characters get in and get out rather quickly without much elaboration on the storytelling. Fast cuts from one to another, like your first two. But as I once discussed with David Goldberg, not a through-line or story line connecting them. His take was that they be separate entities. Again, just a "flavor" of the characters' voices. And they are shorter, 45 - 50 seconds. You can cram a lot of voices in that time frame.

Good stuff though.

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Click to hear TxTom's recording

THIS IS JUST A COMPARISON OF MIC PRE'S. NOT A CRITICAL READ! The first sample is a PreSonus TubePre V2 into an Apogee One (which is performing the A/D conversion). Second is the Apogee One doing full interface duties...pre and a/d interface duties. Third is a Steinberg UR12 doing full interface duties. NO PROCESSING to the samples. NO N/R or anything else. Same mic for all three (TLM-103) Gives you a chance to hear them for reference.

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Since I can't edit the text above...I neglected to say that I did do my best to match the levels to all three. I recorded at maximum sampling that the interfaces allowed. The first two are at 48mhz/16b (Apogee max specs) and the third is at 192khz/24b...the max the Steinberg allows. Most DAWs aren't allowing that sampling rate unless you're using the most current version.

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The last was surprisingly clear and smooth. I am a novice and just looking into buying mics myself, but I can appreciate the comparisons. Thank you for sharing. L

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I liked the last one too, there was less sibilance than the Apogee, but that was about the only difference I could hear.

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The first had a more sibilance than two and three. Two and three were very similar without going back and forth between them, I could not tell the difference.
Quite a tongue twisting read done Very Well.

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Steinburg is the clear winner here. I can't help but wonder what the difference would be with different mic combinations...

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Click to hear lapoucelle's recording

I haven't done theatre in years, but I recently wrote and recorded this quick Alien Abductee narrative that will be mixed into a Black metal song. I have a second 10 second review piece coming up again soon in a demo video for an e-course. This isn't anything I have trained in but I am looking to hone my technique, any advice would be appreciated. Thank you in advance, Lara

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Hey hey L. didn't have script to go by but interpretation , inflections were good .Articulation was spot on . Don't know what you were trying with sound .Heard echo and high frequency sound . Please indicate if using sfx . Overall read would prompt me to give you a shot at a dry read first then add sfx later.

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Thank you for that! I could delete and add the original with script and without echo, the musician liked it for a haunting feel to the work but I do have the original. Thank you again for taking the time to check in - script was:

"I've had these contact and abduction experiences since I was young, it used to frighten me...the hardest part is knowing that you can't talk to anyone about it, not knowing when they might show up. These portals let beings through that feed off of us, show us what they think we want to see in exchange for the promise of uplifting us in some way...but over time I began to realize the cost of the interactions outweighed the benefit and what I once thought was choice became the illusion of choice...at least in my case"

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Click to hear voicedude@me.com's recording

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I like your reads, but for a demo, I think it could be cut up a bit into at least two different ones - if not three. Promo and commercial for sure. It's pretty long as it is.

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Thanks for taking the time to critique my noises. What's a good promo commercial demo length Bean420?

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I think most places suggest 50-65 seconds.

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Have to agree with bean420's point. This is a conglomeration of two or three or more different types of demos or genres.

There is a bit of cross-over here and there for demos (i.e. - a PSA may fit on a commercial demo, possibly even a promo or a character), but they're usually fairly genre specific. Commercial, Narration, Trailer/Promo, Character (possibly separate cartoon and video game demos), Audiobook, etc.

Lengths vary somewhat. Typically a commercial demo is in the 50-70 second range, although I've been told that they are a bit longer in the Canadian market. Narration demos are a bit longer. Audiobook demos, longer still.

Also, as far as commercial demos are concerned, it's important (IMHO) that the product or service that the voice actor is promoting be mentioned in each cut, even if it's completely fictitious, because that's basically what commercials do, sell products or services. I recently attended a SAG Foundation VO Lab session in NYC on commercial demos. One of the leaders of the discussion (I won't mention his name, but he's a voice that you hear every day) played his commercial demo and every cut mentioned a product or service. I mentioned that to him, and he said that it was very deliberate. The guy's been in the business for 30 some odd years.

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Thanks James for your thoughts. Ironically, the reel that lives on my Agents website is only the 1st 1 minute of that demo. I cut it all from work I have done, and I thought just the taglines weren't always the best display of my talents. But its tough being objective about my own stuff. Still it does get me over 300 bookings a year. I have put it up here for peer scrutiny, because after the same reel for a few years, i was thinking about cutting a new reel. So all of your much appreciated suggestions, will compensate for my lack of objectivity. I have just built my 1st website too, which if you guys are up for it, I love your suggestion on it too. https://heyvoicedude.wordpress.com
Thanks for your help

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I love your website, listening to your Tim Minchin Show spot right now hahahaha I love that guy -and I like your song for him :)

I think if your agent doesn't have more than a minute, you probably shouldn't either! And if your website is fairly compartmentalized for the different genres, with your extensive work, so should your demos.

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voicedude -- this is great!
I'm not worthy.....
LOL.

cheers,
DS.

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Got a chance to peruse your, rather extensive, website. Some thoughts:

And this one is REALLY important...

I'd make your contact info easier to find. It's at the BOTTOM of your HOME page! Allowing the casting agents to immediately contact you at that exact moment when they hear the voice they want -that's gonna save them time and make you money. Make it SUPER easy from ANY page.

And add your voice demos in, for those that don't want to stream video and/or want to scroll through your choices easily. Make that also easy to find, and identify it from/as the NON video option.

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Thanks for all your kinds words

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I am still trying figure out how to put a contact on the home page with this template. may have to break down a pay for it. point duly noted. Thanks again

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Bean420 If you liked the Tim Minchin, check out The Funny Stuff on my website

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Amazing man! You got everything covered! I have heard about the traditional rules about keeping the demo reel at around a minute, doesn't seem like bad advice. There is alot of material here, so making multiple demos from this reel doesn't sound like a bad idea either...you've got plenty to work with!

As far as the web site goes, I think you've covered the most important aspect, and that's making it mobile friendly. I was focusing so much on the desktop version until I heard a report about laptop sales falling and tablet/phone sales rising...switched my focus immediately, especially since the desktop version and mobile had a disconnect. One thing I might change is the ability to click once and hear the demo, instead of loading on to another page. My site is 80% finished, but you can hear what I mean at www.dmpvoice.com I have the same practice demo in all players, it's not ready for a full rollout! But, I thought it was important to do what you did, and have the demos on the first page. Next was to have them click once and hear it right away...you never know who is in such a bad mood and that extra click just sends them over the edge...

And if you're getting 300 bookings a year, you're definitely doing something right!

Great job man!

David Michaelson

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Click to hear Jeffrey Tyler Kuntz's recording

Continuing to assemble some different demo samples. Thanks for the frank comments, this is a well-informed community with great advice.

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My first impression is that this is not something that should be included on a demo. It's more fitting as a stand alone message on your personal website or something like that - possibly accompanied by a video presentation, your own commercial for yourself. Possibly include a tour of your studio or information about what equipment you use and how you can deliver clean, clear audio etc.

First - It's too long of a cut for a demo.

Second - It tells the listener what you can do rather than showing the listener what your abilities are or the different styles you are capable of - it's just a little flat and informational. After several listens, I still had a little trouble with the first line. Is it "You're finally here" or "They're finally here" (meaning your types of vocal styles and delivery)? If it's the latter, I only heard one voice telling me about what variations that that voice can do without showing me what that voice can do. That's more effectively done with snippets of different styles of copy.

It's good copy and a good self-promo. Just not demo material IMHO.

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I think that's a great idea James, a promo video of your space!

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Great voice, a bit slow in delivery and sometimes your enunciation and loudness varied. Choice of music was a good one. Recording sound was not far off from being good. You'll get there!

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Click to hear Quarl's recording

Heya. I'm still trying to dial in my vocal style, my new signal chain and my DAW. That's a lot of factors all at once... This demo was done in my home "iso booth", the chain is: AT 2035>Yamaha Audiogram 6>Adobe Audition. I appreciate any and all feedback. Thanks! Carl Donovan http://carldonovan.com

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I like the recording quality - sounds crisp and clear, exactly as it should be through either my headphones or my laptop speakers of dubious quality. I'm far from being a professional engineer, so I wouldn't be able to educate you on any of the finer points (if such points need to be made), but it sounded pretty crystal to me.

Your pacing, diction, and breath control all seem professional and appropriate for each spot, which, in addition to your low voice, makes you nice to listen to. I like how you easily switched it up from the first spot - slow, soothing, and encouraging - to the second one, which was lively and peppy. Shows you can go both ways.

I only have one thing I could point out that might stand a little improvement, possibly two; admittedly, my forte is the audiobook field, but it's just something I noticed. The softer spots (like the first one) were great in delivery, I think, but I think they could stand to be JUST a hair louder. My headphones have no problem picking up the lower or quieter parts, but my laptop speakers (again, of dubious quality) had a little bit of trouble. It's a small thing, but a tweak I think that might help.

The second kind-of thing is that it sounds a bit like you rolled the R in "cutthroat" - not a huge deal, just something that might sound odd for a quick second to a listener.

Beyond that, it sounds nice on the whole. Good to hear you're moving forward down the path of the voice actor.

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Thanks a lot James. I'm working on audiobooks as well. Here's my ACX profile with two samples of my narration work:
https://www.acx.com/narrator?p=A17F7S7FSTJHRF

Carl

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Sound quality is very good. Shouldn't be a problem as far as ACX and Audible standards are concerned.

I looked at your profile on ACX. Dude, you should up your PFH rate. Do people tell you that you look like Ronan Farrow? Your deep voice quality kind of belies your youthful appearance.

I also listened to your samples. "The Art of Racing in the Rain" is a really nice story. However, it is just a little plodding in pace. And though the the story is funny and interesting (from the dog's POV), I found myself becoming disengaged and the voice in my head kept shouting, "Get on with it!" Breaths and some extraneous noises are perfectly fine (and expected, as far as breaths are concerned), but the sighs were just a little too much and too many for my taste.

The pace of "The Underwater Zombie" held my attention and the humor really came through. Very, very nice. The acting training also comes through, without sounding actor-y.

As far as this demo goes. The things mentioned above by James (no relation) are good points. I might add that, at times, the diction and enunciation might be a little too crisp - in that I can hear the deliberate effort rather than the flow.

A good portion of the spots sound very similar. In particular, cuts 1, 3, 5 & 6 could be interchangeable in tone and delivery - the same for cuts 2 & 4. I would suggest picking the strongest one of each group as representative of the style of that particular delivery (because both styles are strong enough, we get it) and flex your vocal muscles in a couple of other directions. In other words, I hear only 2 types of delivery when I get feeling that you're capable of more variation - so show me.

BTW - Check the common (American English, anyway) pronunciation of "Hyundai". "He-un-day" may be correct in Korean, but Jeff Bridges pronounces it "Hun-day" and that's good enough for me.

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I'm glad you got the Jeff Bridges connection, James. That was quite deliberate. And, in fact all of the VO's I found for Hyundai that WEREN'T voiced by Jeff Bridges include the Y.

I have to confess, the picture is a 15 year old headshot as I haven't had new shots for quite some time. I'm a bit more grizzled and ugly now...

Thanks for your feedback on the narration samples at ACX. I've done professional VO in the past but true "voice acting" is a new one for me. Knowing that most readers tend to rush the read, I was trying to emphasize my comfort with the material. Your input is very valuable to me. Thank you.

As for my PFH rate at Audible, I just started there so thought I'd use a low rate to get the first bit of work. Then I realized I have a client from my web design days who has thirty or so titles on Amazon that have yet to be turned into audiobooks so I now have five of those under contract. I guess I can go ahead and give myself a raise!

Thank you for your input James and James. This work can be very isolating at and it's nice to talk to other human beings from time to time...

Carl

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A 15 Year Old Headshot! Oi!

As far as the "Y" goes. I hear you. Maybe my bad, but even locally here in the NYC area, the VO's usually do it Jeff's way. Maybe different in your area. It just struck my ear as being a little off - by no means "wrong", just odd to my ear.

Pix? Yep. time for new ones. Somewhere along the line I heard that one (as a voice artist) can be prejudged from their photo - unfair, but only human nature. (There's a famous story about a 30 year VO veteran, his agent and a casting director. Everyone in the business should know this story.) That's why I have an avatar on my ACX profile and VO website. Just my choice. Some people use logos or caricatures and such.

And, yes, you should give yourself that raise. You have a good sound (voice wise and production quality wise) and good skills as well (from a fellow thespian to another). Don't sell yourself short. Low-balling doesn't lift all boats. Demand to be paid what you're worth.

(END OF LECTURE)

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Thanks again, James. I'll probably go with the Jeff Bridges reading. No reason to rock the boat...

And I already gave myself that raise to $100-200 PFH.

Your advice is very helpful and I appreciate your critique of my abilities. I hadn't really considered the impact of using the headshot that doesn't match my tone.

You're helping me tremendously!

Carl

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Click to hear LockeClone's recording

I less looking for feedback on quality and more looking for comments on my branding and capabilities. Like: What keywords should I be using, and how might I sell myself? Also, what production companies might I target with this? Thank you!

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You have a pretty good grasp on a lot of voices, but a lot of them feel cartoonish (which is probably your intention). Thus, I think you'd have a good shot with selling yourself to production companies that focus on dubbing animated cartoons. As far as branding goes, you seem like you'd click with the brand image of a character voice actor, so you might want to lean in that direction if this is primarily the kind of work you'd like to produce.

Peer Feedback:

That demo really was pleasant to listen to. You do seem to have a flair for characters and the ability to do all kinds of voices. The recording quality was nicely done, although I think the kind of commenting you're leaning toward receiving is more on your strengths and what to do with them, right?

As McDoogle said, you'd probably do well branding yourself as a character actor, particularly toward the sillier side of things - cartoons ranging from SpongeBob to Family Guy could easily fit the bill. The only piece of advice I can really give right now is perhaps to switch up the track order a little bit, if possible. All your voices are amazing, but I sometimes feel as if I forget exactly what LockeClone sounds like - not just the individual characters, but you - what do you sound like, inherently, that other voice actors don't quite have? So maybe switch up the tracks a bit, give us more opportunities to hear characters that are closer to your normal voice before going back to the silly side. I feel like your second and last characters might fit that description.

But again, very nice to listen to, and I think you're clearly quite talented at this. As with anything, you can go far if you set your mind to it.

Peer Feedback:

Based on this demo you obviously want to brand yourself as a character/cartoon talent unless you have more "standard" voices that we're not hearing which is fine. If you're looking for a logo you'll certainly want to make it cartoonish.

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Thanks for the feedback guys! Much appreciated. Sorry it took me so long to respond.

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Click to hear foxwolf2099's recording

Hi there. I'm just starting out in VO and this is my first demo. I'd appreciate any critiques. Thanks!

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Peer Feedback:

Sounds very good to me. I like the variety of spots. Did you get this demo from the folks here at Edge? If so, did you record it at one of their studios or did you do it at your home studio?

Peer Feedback:

Sounds professionally put together. However, many of the spots have the same feel/tone/speed of read. A bit more variety would be nice.

Your enunciation isn't clear on some of your words and it occurs through out your demo. "punch to i.." "workou.." "walle.." Seems like it is usually a work ending with a T sometimes an ending -ed. I couldn't understand the name of the medical group, Holt, Hope?

Overall your reads sound relaxed and natural. Certainly have some talent.

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Sounds like a fairly competitive demo to me. I get who you are and what you can do.

Only thing to do now is, when you book some spots, replace the fake spots with some the of the booked ones.

Peer Feedback:

You've got a really nice voice for this. To echo what others have said, sometimes your consonant sounds at the end of certain words becomes muddled. I heard some weak "s" noises as well as the "t" and "ed" noises redrocket mentioned. Your "s" noises in particular sound just a little bit wet; maybe it would be a good idea in the future to make sure you're well-hydrated but your mouth is dry before you start recording.

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Thanks guys, and in particular redrocket and McDoogle for bringing my enunciation weaknesses to my attention. Much appreciated! Oh and the medical group was Hoag.

I had the demo recorded at a local studio down in Orange County where I'm at.

Peer Feedback:

I'm with James --
this sound competitive. nice job.

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Click to hear chrissy45's recording

Hello: Working on a Telephony demo and would like to get feed back on this short demo as far as content and sound goes. Thanks, Christine

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Peer Feedback:

Can't wait to hear others chime in on this, since I have no idea what is expected in a telephony demo. Voice sounds nice. There wasn't really any variety in the reads, pace, style, etc but not sure if that is what is expected.

Peer Feedback:

Hi Chrissy --
I hear that you are using fade-outs as a transition between spots. At first, I thought you might've turned your head away from the mic or something. I don't think you'll want a client to think that on their first listen.

I think (disclaimer: I'm not an expert on IVR/telephony recordings) each spot should be different enough that a transition is obvious without the fade. Can you do a variety of styles of delivery?
fast vs. articlulate and deliberate; corporate vs. local retail (e.g. "Car Toys"); stuff like that.
can you use a music bed to queue a listener to distinctly separate clips?

This looks like a nice reference:
http://www.edgestudio.com/telephony-voice-over-artists
you might "borrow" some ideas for these produced demos -- know your competition.

and don't be shy, IMHO, to throw in a low-resolution clip - they sound more realistic, even though the audio quality might suck.

hope that's helpful,
DS

Peer Feedback:

I can hear some background noise in the first spot too, so you may want to rerecord it. Sounds like someone coughing or something... "tone" on the last bit sounded clipped too.

I definitely like the idea of using music to bring the flow on, and create different atmospheres for your clips. Every other one would even help smooth it out for the listener. You may also want a hold message clip in there, breaking up the selection clips.

Peer Feedback:

Very clear and distinct, but I would do the copy just a little slower. Theoretically, you have someone on the phone and you don't want to prolong the delivery too much since they're waiting on you to let them leave a message. But, an ever so slightly slower delivery would give you a better chance to communicate that the missed call is important and will be returned.

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Thank you to everyone for your comments, suggestions. I will work on another Telephony demo and try some music as well. Hope you will listen again in a week or so.

Cheers- Christine.