Features

Get Feedback

Listen & Give Feedback

By Category

By Type

By Script Genre

Edge Studio

Friday September 22

ONE DAY SPECIAL

To further your learning, get a Performance Checkup with each hour Private Training Session you sign-up for.

Want to talk with us?
Call 888-321-3343.

The Voice Actor Feedback Forum

Script Genres > English Adult > Narration > Announcements

    Back to top
    ACME Pet Stores

    Script:

    Always ones for tweeting, now we’re on Twitter! Follow us at @ACMEPetStores to get instant updates from ACME pet care professionals on what's happening at ACME and beyond!

    86 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lynn.norris's recording

    Submitted this for the weekly contest.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-56463/script-recording-59233.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Just curious. Do you get the joke in the first sentence? It's a pet store - you have birds in a pet store - birds tweet - now you tweet on Twitter. It was up and light, but I didn't sense the fun(ny). And it was a bit choppy up to "...to get". I heard rustling or steps in the back ground before the slate. Some judicious editing would eliminate that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey jamesromick - thanks for taking the time to comment! Yes, I definitely got the joke - didn't want to hit it too hard though. I just finished taking Naomi's Authentic Voice Technique seminar so I was trying to say it as I would - dry and a little understated. Perhaps a bit too. You're right about the rustle - I'll keep a better ear out for that in the future! Thanks again.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Jame's critique. I'd especially go for a smooth flow with "now we're on twitter". The end was much smoother.

    I was on Sat's call, too. Did you bring up the issue of getting caught up in the emotion of the Appalachia read? If so (sorry if it was someone else!), I think that's a GREAT issue to have, that you can feel the crisis of it and can tap into the power of that for your acting. I would have made a different word choice than Naomi's word "ego" when discussing it. I get what she said in an intellectual, Freudian sense, but I think the word risks a negative connotation that could get you bogged down and judgmental with yourself at just the wrong moments in reads. I would go more Buddhist when thinking of it. If you start getting sucked in too far to the emotion to stay on message, you could think, "Oh, there's that part of my personality, again", in a very non-judgmental, simply acknowledging it way (more like, "Oh, that apple's red, isn't it?"). Then you could divert your focus slightly with things like being present in the moment--how the rug feels under your feet, how cold or hot the room is, the rumble of your voice in the back of your chest--just something mild to take off the edge of the emotion and gain control without adding in an extra layer of judgement or worry that might get in the way of your read.

    Hope there's something helpful there in my rambling. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia - Thanks for your comments. That wasn't me though. I read the Veggie Chips copy! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Lol! Okay, then--my post was still greatly cathartic for me. ;)

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your read. It made me smile. You have great timing. I also noticed the steps just before the slate.

    Back to top

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8010/script-recording-61782.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Looks like you haven't posted for a while. I tried to call up some of your previous recordings, but there seems to be a glitch with the site that wouldn't allow it.

    I wanted to listen to some of your previous recordings to see if I was hearing what I was hearing. Are you wee bit Irish? Or possibly Canadian? Or are you affecting an accent? Some words like "out" and "about" sound a bit Canadian, but overall, there is a certain lilt to your voice (especially with the phrase, "I donno when I'll feel better") that is definitely not a neutral Middle American sound.

    From the top. - There is quite a bit of mouth noise. The read is nice, but there is a lot of emotional tug and pull here for this young woman and this merely sounded a bit angry and depressed most of the way through. I am not one to make a judgement about the recording quality, but that may have been a factor in the audition too.

    Peer Feedback:

    I am Canadian. hah.. Thanks for the reply. For it to sound sad and depressing was what I was going for so that's good. As for quality of the mic, please, let me know your thoughts. My mic and sound card and high quality but sometimes I do get a clicky sound which I can't fix! I just don't know how.... yet.
    Thanks for the comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Depress and Sad was clear. I was just pointing out that there is a little room here and there for a change of pace, some other, lighter emotion. Ya know how people have that nervous laugh when the look back on something hurtful or that they did wrong? That's the kind of thing I'm talking about.

    Back to top
    Asthma

    Script:

    For a kid with asthma, the joys of childhood quickly become living nightmares. A playful kitten, a cuddly puppy, a bouquet of flowers, all are potential triggers for terrifying attacks. Don't let Asthma rob another childhood. Call 1-800-Lung-USA. The American Lung Association.

    43 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    I'm still working on the crackling sounds in my recordings and trying to follow the helpful advice of my peers so here is an mp3 that is not processed at all. I'm hoping it's not too faint. Let me know how it sounds. Again, thank you all so much...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-409/script-recording-35429.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I couldnt hear any crackling sound on your recoeding, some mouth noise may be present but otherwise it sound good.
    regards
    balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Crystal, I can hear what you are talking about. The first part is ok, but I hear what sounds like minute static clicks toward the end. I think you might try a high cut filter... Of course there are de-clicker's/de-cracklers out there, I use iZotope (there's a trial I believe) might work for you.
    It didn't sound over processed to me.

    Back to top
    Building Announcement

    Script:

    MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION! - MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION !
    This is the building management. A situation currently exists that requires everyone to immediately exit the building. Please remain calm and follow the exit signs directing you to the emergency stairwell exit on the EAST side of the building and relocate to the Huntington Park. Please do not use the middle stairwell and do not attempt to use the elevators. Do not re-enter the building unless instructed to do so. Thank You.

    38 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LIngram96's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81615/script-recording-63755.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there . . . I liked your delivery on this, but the volume of the audio was very low. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    good delivery and yes you volume was very low

    Peer Feedback:

    Good just low volume.

    Back to top

    79 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear smatth1's recording

    I produced this recording myself and I know that it is not perfect. i am trying to gage where I need to get to in order to become marketable.I recognize that there are many detriments to a self produced tape but one has to begin somewhere and this was my point of origin. I expect to enroll at Edge soon but I just wanted to see where I am at this point so feel free to be kind.(smile)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6375/script-recording-76920.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Reason 99.9% of people shouldn't produce their own demo is that they don't hear themselves with an un-biased ear. Releasing anything like this would do far more damage to your chances than good.

    For that last spot, I'm hearing a radio guy in a very live recording space. The advice an edge coach would tell you is: "sound less like a radio guy and don't record in such a live space."

    Peer Feedback:

    I suppose that TxTom means well when he is being so harsh in his appraisal of my submission. I know that this is not at your level but I am trying to determine if I have a future in this endeavor, You have many submissions and comments about others are they all so sour?

    Peer Feedback:

    Would you rather hear a direct comment based on what I actually hear? Or would you rather me blow smoke up your privates and give you pats on the back for having the guts to get in front of microphone and speak? If you want false platitudes, please then...ignore my critique.

    I heard someone speak as if they were "doing announcer guy on the radio"...we hear that a lot from people with radio experience. For the vast majority of VO, it's not a preferred delivery. And that's what an edge coach would tell you.

    I heard a LOT of echo from that last spot. Echo from a recording space is not preferred and should be avoided/minimized at all cost for serious VO. And that's what an edge coach would tell you.

    And that's what I advised.

    Now ...is that so harsh?

    Do you have a future in VO? Practice, practice some more...get critiques on submissions either here or with peers elsewhere (not a lot of elsewheres) and work to polish the good and try to excise the less good from your performances. Advice often given: "Everyone has a voice...it's what you do with it that matters."

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your honesty, i felt that your initial comments were meant to wound rather than inform. I appreciate that your experience gives you the basis for offering me direction which is what I want and need. I will continue to work and perfect the less than goods and I thank you for your comments.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm guessing that the Rich Colonial Funeral Home and Rainbow Records is closer to your natural voice than anything else on this recording. So I'll start from there.

    You have a rich voice with wide dynamic range (pitch) and certain delivery style that is more announcer than guy next door. (Nothing particularly "wrong" with that at all - it is still somewhat in demand, but only for particular kinds of copy. See below.).

    First spot - It's a little confusing. I'm guessing that it's radio imaging (WJIL - FM radio?). Or is it just an excuse for excessive processing? Either way, a general rule of thumb is to lead the demo off with your "money voice" - who you really are and what (copy) and delivery suits you best. Not sure that this is it. Also, Radio imaging isn't something that would necessarily fit well on a strictly commercial demo (maybe at the end), they are generally their own animal. Yes, there is some overlap, but mixing and matching on a single demo is generally not a good way to go.

    Rich Funeral Home - Not sure about the music. I don't think of a "beat" when I think of a funeral home (which confused me as to what the product/service this actually was until I heard the words "funeral home"). Also, most people would want to be comforted in their time of need/grief. IMHO, the delivery is too "up" and "direct" (announcery) for this copy. Warm, somber and caringly friendly is more the ticket.

    Rainbow Records - Best spot on the demo. A little "hot" (loud). I would suspect that there might be a little "clipping" here. Announcer delivery fits this copy just fine.

    Security - A little funky with the processing and/or recording environment - lots of aural artifacts, echo and a very metalic quality to the voice. Overly processed. Sounds very much like that radio imaging thing again. There are also other ways to go with the delivery. I've already heard "announcer". Give me gritty - like McGruff - or warningly friendly like a fireman or a first responder. Real hard edit at the end.

    Last spot - E-learning? Doesn't belong on a commercial demo. Again, E-learning is it's own animal - meaning, separate demo. It's much too long and the edits are awkward. Sound quality is sub-par - sounds like it was recorded across the room in a live gymnasium. The engineering (editing, FX processing, etc.) leaves a lot to be desired. More familiarity with your DAW is probably in order.

    Yes, TxTom can be somewhat "pointed" in his critiques. However, he does make some very valid points.

    One (and the Edge coaches do harp on this) is that the currently sought after delivery "style" is (say it with me) "conversational", but that doesn't necessarily apply to all copy. How would you ever make that record store copy "conversational"? Possible, I suppose, but what you did seems to fit just fine. Plus, I get who this guy is. He's probably your "money voice". Not so with the funeral home copy though. In that one, the "one-to-one" somber comforting conversation is a much better fit and would probably be the delivery that would land the job.

    Another is that critiques and critiquers (?) vary in tone, helpfulness and candor. There have been some heated postings on the Forum and I, personally, have been in the middle of some - even, admittedly, been an instigator. Such is the mix of personalities you will find here. My advice: Take what you can use and disregard the rest. Beyond the basics of being able to read words into a microphone, there is a lot of subjectivity to this field. It's like the old saying, "Opinions are like..." Well, you can fill in the rest.

    Last thoughts: If it is your intention, get into the Edge program, get coaching and go through the process of finding out your particular niche (delivery style, genre[s] of VO that suit you, etc.) before slapping a demo together on your own. There is an anectdote (that is familiar to most working VOs) of a guy who shopped around a really lousy demo and it him took 5 years to undo the damage and finally get work. There is an adage, "You don't get a second chance to make a good first impression."

    Peer Feedback:

    Just FYI: I've never intended to be mean in my comments. I tend to be short ...definitely less verbose than James, and I tend to get right to the point. If I seem harsh...it's not my intention, but a nugget of advice for anyone trying this stuff out is to develop a thick skin and (like James said) take the advice you can use and toss out the stuff you feel might be useless.

    Being on radio, you've got a lot of experience doing radio spots locally and that will give you a certain leg up in that genre, but you need to be able to deliver a variety of styles and tones for wide distribution stuff. So that's where practice and more practice will benefit.

    Back to top
    Emergency in the installation

    Script:

    Attention: Please evacuate the installations in an orderly way. Stay calm. Evacuate the building through the closest emergency exit and go to the nearest outside meeting point.

    The emergency has finalized. Please return to your work stations.

    This is a test. It requires no action.

    79 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Audience: multi-lingual professional, Campus Setting (think Google Europe or CERN Belgium) Instructions- Calm and directive, drawing attention to specific instructions for evacuation. NON Alarming, broadcast to a large facility (10 buildings on a large campus). Ok, so I set out to diagram the message without hitting any words that could cause alarm. I also thought about something else... The computer from Star Trek, but more soothing, an omnipresent voice telling you to leave now and where to go. The aftermath. I got the job... on top of that, the customer went to the other 4 voice overs (Spanish, German, Italian and French) and (paid them) to redo their recordings in a style similar to mine. :) win Technically, I slurred 3 words... I did 2 takes with a few subtle differences. I was a little more insistent in take 2, and a little friendlier on my invitation to "Please return to your workstations...." All comments welcome as always. Please say hello! Nodo420

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-51596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed your written explanation almost as much as the recording itself. Neat to get this behind-the-scenes info, including the thinking that went into your interpretation. Ted, your production quality sounds much better than a year ago. Wow. Clean and warm. Soothing and insistent would be challenging; you make it sound easy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Why thanks Bill A. That's Really high praise coming from you ! Thank you for taking the time!

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a good example of taking direction and then bringing your own creativity to the read. While "In the event of an emergency" directives may not seem very creative how you approached it was. Good work Ted.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ted, I liked your recording very much. Your voice is nice and calm, yet provides the urgency for an announcement like this. Great work. And congrats on landing the job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Awww....ya sucked me into listening to two takes!! I hate multi-take submissions. LOL

    The only thing I'd pick on is the glottal stop at "in an orderly way" on the second take. It's present on the first take too, but it didn't stand out quite so much. I liked the tone of the second read a little more...felt a shade more authoritative while remaining friendly. Great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    really nice
    congrats on the job
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    I Like the calming nature but you may want to try a read that puts a bit of bite and variation into it. remember this might be played over sirens or alarms. You might be drowned out a bit. Maybe a bit more punchy.
    Just my .02

    Peer Feedback:

    Insistent where it needs to be, calming when that's appropriate, not that easy to do - good job!

    Back to top

    21 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/goldengate.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The delivery is a bit choppy, especially in the middle of sentences. Some places it happens when there isn't even a comma. There is a lot of separation when you are taking a breath, and the flow of the sentence is completely lost. This makes it sound like you are simply reading, rather than delivering.

    One of the things you will definitely need to learn is how to remove your breaths and clicks from your audition recordings. Another thing you might benefit from is taking a larger, fuller breath before you read a sentence. Mark your breaths, and know where it isn't appropriate to break for a breath. You don't want to say "I'm going to town for (breath) a loaf of bread. We don't speak that way normally, and voice over is no different. In fact, the push for a more "natural" delivery will make this something you need to be very good at doing. "Act Naturally" may be an oxymoron, but it's something that will help elevate you as a better performer and deliverer of text.

    That said, you have a very pleasant voice, which will be great for upbeat things. It's very nice to listen to, so now that you have the raw instrument, you will get better with technique and hopefully do very well!

    Back to top

    78 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    Always liked the improbability of: "It's a Hockey Night in South Florida!" Originally put AB Logic's Hit Man for the backing track but thought folks would mention that's a copyrighted piece...and that would be problematic. Sliced up some royalty free stuff to fit.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-83254.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Touzet -
    cool imaging piece! I've noticed that you've been really expanding your range lately, and doing a nice job of it.
    I thought the Announcer part (the 2nd line) was great. It sounded legit to me.
    Are you getting work with your characters and promo stuff? I'm guessing yes.

    cheers!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dave,
    Good to hear from you. Getting a few things here and there on one of the pay-to-play sites. I sort of view that site as some pretty good boot camp training. Plenty of scripts and a lot of competition.

    As far as this track goes, I'm 0-3 on selling the first line (You, my wife and a Panther fan buddy of mine). They all said it started working for them at "Welcome to the BB&T Center...". Nothing like a good focus group. ;-). I appreciate the comment.

    - touzet -

    Peer Feedback:

    Great sound great quality.....Keep on truck'n!!!

    Back to top

    86 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Richard.Hawks's recording

    Going through the script library to find that right genre for my unique sounding voice. Looking for constructive criticism and any suggestions on other areas of the VO industry to try. I am working on my demo and am seeking to find where my voice really fits in the industry.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81188/script-recording-93064.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Richard, very nice voice. The promo seemed choppy to me. Seduce me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mouth noise in excess. For people listening on headphones, it's rather disturbing. Hydrate before reading to minimize the mouth noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Can't edit my previous comment for some reason...but you say you're working on your demo?? I hate to break some reality out here...but you don't sound close to ready for that.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with both of the above. Just because you have a nice smooth voice doesn't mean that you can just read a piece of copy and make it work. Randy is correct. You need to seduce the listener. Your read is very choppy and has no feeling. Try and mark up your script so you have words within it to inflect on and engage the listener. Just work on coloring the read and I am sure you will sound great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for the info and critiques. All of your info was helpful.

    @TxTom - I can't get better if I don't practice, record, find mistakes, and improve. Thanks again for your feedback.

    Peer Feedback:

    The reason I made the comment about a demo is because you mentioned it and if that's your thought at this point, I was making the point here that it's too early. If you're getting private instruction, your coach (if worth their salt) wouldn't let you do one before you're ready. However we've seen a few come through here, post a few files and then literally use the files they posted here to create their own personally made demo. That is a plan for disaster. It's just important to not put the cart before the horse in this business.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom hit the nail on the head. The recording was slurred and sleepy. The recording quality is ok but the proximity was too much on the mic. I listen to jazz (all types of music) and I wouldn't be able to use it for a bumper. Definitely not demo ready. You need to pick up the speed and clean up the articulation. Just the facts from behind the glass as a producer.

    Back to top
    New York Basketball

    Script:

    New York Liberty:

    Aaaaaaaaand now the starting lineup for your 2013 New York Liberty! Let’s give it up for our starting Forward: Number Three, Kelsey Bone!

    New York Knicks

    Aaaaaaaaand now the starting lineup for your 2013 New York Knicks! Let’s give it up for our starting Forward: Number Seven, Carmelo Anthony!

    34 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear storm51's recording

    new closet room only just started to be in VO. I am hearing some white noise in the closet so i will be putting up some sound improvements in the near future. How clean does it need to be? oh and thanks for being around

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-70730/script-recording-62388.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know where everyone has gone...

    OK, generally you're not going to get a lot of feedback on a contest entry posted in the feedback forum because others who have entered the contest are reluctant to say much. Call it a conflict of interest or whatever...

    My read of this script below was posted as a joke, so I hope I am not leading people astray.

    One thing I will mention with your read is something that gets hammered on quite a bit in the analysis that accompanies every week's winners announcement: the level of the slate should match the level of the rest of the read. In your case, the slate level is quite low, which will cause a listener to turn the monitors up, whereupon they will be blown out by the audio of the script.

    Also, you left about 6 seconds of silence after the slate. That's a bit much - you should edit it out.

    Try a script from the script library and post that - you should get some useful feedback (no need to slate when posting script library reads in here, btw. They ask for it in the contests to see who is following instructions, and the instructions are usually different every week).

    Peer Feedback:

    You'll want to minimize ambient noise as much as possible. You can take out noise with software but the less you do it with software the better off you'll be. You want to be using software to clean up residual noise. The less the better. If you get too heavy with noise reduction it will encroach on your vocal.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you both for your comments. Man i have a lot to learn. again thanks Sundance and Richurd

    Professional Feedback:

    Thank you so much for selecting me to offer feedback. I'm hearing quite a significant amount of noise in this file. It sounds as though it could be raining outside a nearby window. This could be the result of inexpensive equipment... or steady rain outside your window. ;-)

    The room seems as though it may be fairly well treated. I'm not hearing significant reflections or anything that concerns me with your actual environment or space. It sounds to me like there is a weak link in your recording chain causing the hiss and also resulting in the tone sounding thin and squawky.

    Equipment is replaceable which is far more easy to deal with than it is to change a room. This is good news overall.

    Keep at it and thanks again!

    Dan

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach October 18, 2013 at 5:01PM

    Peer Feedback:

    Storm-

    I don't read others comments until I have written my own so do not know if I am re-hashing or not...

    First, I entered this week as well...tough spot...but GOOD practice for over the top reading. You took a deep breath before your read -- that is fine but we should not hear that...You were excited but not exuberant. There was also not as much 'smile' in your read as the fans up in seat 77D would like to hear...give 'em your all and the engineer will tell you your are 'off the scales -- take it down a notch

    If you can go one octave lower -- try it and see does that shoe fit...

    Nice voice...Good Job!

    Bill

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Mannix. alll comments are welcome and learned from.

    Norm

    Back to top
    New York Knicks - Weekly Contest Entry

    Script:

    This is the script from this week's Script contest. Seek detailed and actionable feedback on diction, tone, quality, sincerity and believability

    33 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mannix3453's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-68199/script-recording-62304.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I didnt feel like you were pumped enough yourself in the delivery to pump me up. As for detailed, actionable feedback... dont just say the name of the team, that should be hit too, and hit hard!! This is something they would say at every home game as the team makes their entrance after all. Feel the energy! I would also try to color "number seven" differently from "starting forward" to make it stand out. Not necessary lengthen it like you did with "lets" and Carmello's name (and I liked that), but maybe a crisper delivery or change in inflection would do the trick. Play with it, have fun. And let that fun seep into the read! Good luck

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I also think you could be more excited about this. I would try it over the top and see what happens! You can always tone down if need to. All those announcers seem to put it on big time and it always tickles me. I'm still debating wether to try the female version as it just doesn't sound right with my voice. But then, I should have a go at it all as you never know right? Have a great day.

    Back to top

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sentry40335's recording

    A couple changes: Getting more comfortable with Tascam, (used the DP-03 model this time with Sennheiser e-835s) uploaded into Audacity to edit (which I tried to keep minimal) then used Wave Pad Sound Editor to normalize and Swirch Sound File Converter to change it to mp3. Il hear some room noise, which I'm still hoping to correct with more moving blankets, and I'm frustrated with trying to master my breathing patterns, but at this age, it's only SO manageable. Wish I'd quit smoking years before I did. : (

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123511/script-recording-96127.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought this was a great read with a lot of humor. I bought into you narrative voice right away as you sounded to be seriously reading a eulogy.
    Go for it!

    CT Voice

    Back to top

    35 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    In my recent recordings I've been trying out new genres and this is one of them.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/pre-boarding-announcement.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris --
    I like the flow - nice job. I hear these things all the time, and you pretty much nailed it.
    It seems like you aired out a little at "begin boarding at this time".
    the only thing you're missing is the typical really lousy sound quality and popping that the real announcements have. The desk agents seem to want to eat the mic.
    :-)

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it's ironic that this is the type of announcement that would have poorer quality than my recording quality. :) To be fair, I don't think most airports have good PA systems and those poor attendants might actually have to eat the mic. Thanks for your compliment on the read, Dave.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,

    Agree with Dave's comments. Good read and flows nice.

    I see you are requesting comments on recording quality as well for this one. There is some room echo in the recording, and I hear some something scratching on your mic during the last couple seconds.

    Perhaps simply building a pillow fort around your recorder and letting it rest on something so you are not tempted to touch it while recording is all you need :)

    Have a great day!

    darcyd

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Darcyd. I'll experiment with the pillow fort.

    Peer Feedback:

    I will be awaiting a sample!!

    Back to top

    26 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear greta_Sinclaire's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83117/script-recording-64766.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    There's a lot of background noise (is it supposed to be plane cabin noise?) and the reverb seems excessive and unnecessary (is the plane empty?). If I am not mistaken, you seem to be using a noise gate because I heard a drop-out after "devices".

    Although your diction is good for the most part, some words fell by the wayside. Examples:
    The N sounds on "Hong Kong" and "San Francisco" were a little mushy.
    "approximately" sounded like "approsimitly"
    Big P pop on "please"
    "and secure" sounded like "ensecure" - I need the D and separation of the words.
    "overhead" gives away a certain "urban-ness" to your natural voice - not a criticism, but it is not the "neutral American" accent that one might expect from this type of genre. There may also be passengers from other non-English speaking countries who may need more clarity to understand the language.

    I see that this is your first post on the forum. I would suggest posting some recordings with only your voice, minus the bells and whistles, so that we may get a better idea of your true voice, delivery, interpretation and analysis of the text.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Greta,
    You have a pleasant-sounding voice for this sort of thing, and I like your tone and pacing. I also thought you had good diction overall, though I agree with James about the examples he gave. (Disclaimer: I'm a newbie.)
    Best,
    Peter

    Back to top

    98 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear marysboy1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100612/script-recording-79720.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't see the script but your pace looks good, however there's a background noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Only coming through the right channel. Same with the previous "Becks" read. Check to see if your software is recording in mono.

    There is also an electronic hum in the recording. May be the result of bad cables, coiled cables, florescent lighting or another electronic source too close to the mic. Also hearing a lot of stuff in the background, like a TV that's on or people in another room having a conversation or something.

    Some word articulations were bothersome - "recognize" being an example, it sounded like "recanize". All of those little pauses were a little "actor-y". One is effective when placed in a good spot and possibly a second one strategically placed, but four sounds deliberate and calculated - thus "actor-y".

    The other thing with PSA's about serious subjects like this is that many of them need to leave the listener with a positive message. That's what's missing here in the last line. If the beginning is a lament, the end is a positive resolution. The "I kicked it, and so can you" message.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the critiques. I guess I'm being a little dramatic, trying to convey a message? I'll work on mono- stereo problem too.

    Back to top
    Sample 1 announcement

    Script:

    Listen up everybody! I have a great news to share . I just got off the phone with the CEO of our company and We Won the Account!!!

    71 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear swathi.rkrish@gmail.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105439/script-recording-83089.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I felt the excitement in the read but there didn't feel like a complete build up. There was great energy but it seemed to be turned up at the beginning instead of building up to the good news. The quality of the clip was ok. I felt like it was a sort of flat but it could be the way you exported the file. Would like to hear more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your feedback. This is my first recording ever :) !
    All points noted and will work on it.

    Back to top
    T-Gen Radio Spot

    Script:

    Men, do you know that your testosterone starts declining at thirty and keeps falling every year? Losing testosterone can lead to stress, mood swings, a negative outlook on life and not to mention “decreased sexual desire.” That’s why we created T-Gen to naturally help boost testosterone levels. T-Gen contains an ingredient proven to significantly increase healthy testosterone levels.

    21 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DeanH's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5777/script-recording-27521.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Dean -
    Your voice is pleasing and your read was well articulated. My chief suggestion would be to increase your pacing and (ironically given the copy) your energy level. Try to impart some sense of urgency particularly in the first sentence - you're highlighting a problem! Since T-Gen's claim is to increase vitality and energy levels, I'd imagine you'd want to really sound "peppy" in the later half of the read. While you're performance is pleasant, dignified and measured, I think it doesn't quite fit the copy in this particular instance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Scott. I didn't include direction notes, but they indicate "We need a voice suitable for an urban format radio station and older demographic station." It was hard interpreting exactly what's being asked for, and I settled on a more "measured" delivery splitting the difference in what my mind's eye interprets as two distinct target audiences. Then again, maybe I'm making an incorrect assumption to lower the "peppiness" for the "older demographic," particularly since we're talking about testosterone levels! I appreciate the candid assessment.

    Back to top
    The Time Capsule

    Script:

    History TTC-2012-05-07 " The Time Capsule " How we lived. Who we loved. And what we over came, a world premiere event at 7 eastern and 10 pacific on "The History Channel"

    52 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ladynwaitin's recording

    Hi This is my second time submitting for a mic sound check the first one wasn't good so I bought a new mic. What I liked critiqued is my new mic, how does it sound. I also would like to know how do I sound ? I'm still trying to understand how everything works I just learn how to convert .wma to .mp3.The next scripts I'm sending are just edge scripts that I used for practice. Thank You for your time and help.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4972/script-recording-29404.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello!

    Regarding your mic: it sounds like you are still quite distant from it. There is a great deal of noise, probably from your computer, that the mic is picking up. You need more signal (your sound) than the noise in your recordings. Somehow you need to reduce the amount of room noise.

    Your voice is nice but you need to work a little more on sounding like you are not reading. This is the most challenging thing for all of us. But keep practicing and keep on going!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi ladynwaitin,
    What you want to know requires a lengthy answer. There are a whole string of sound issues that you will not only have to deal with but also understand how to eliminate. As Scott mentioned we all fight this issue. For now try some simple troubleshooting. All you have to do is grab a comforter and drape it over you as you read. Listen to a before and after recording and that should tell you if it is the room your in. If not, you move on to more troubleshooting.

    Peer Feedback:

    There are great videos online , via youtube and alike , on cheap sound proofing , and home recording . Here is a link to a sound proofing one that alot of people use,, and is fairly cheap - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VIDlu9exIek&feature=fvsr

    As far as how far to be from the mic,, here is a clip that shows the guys from family guy working,, notice,, they are only inches from the mic, and they work with the nice mics,,, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5am1bJfjOJE&feature=related

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Scott you do have a nice voice, as it has a very friendly tone to it, but try not to sound like you're reading the script, add emotion and concentrate on the pitch and pace.

    Review the feedback from Richurd and KNM, as they're excellent with sound recording issues and try this one over with just a little more emotion.

    Hope to hear more scripts from you.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Back to top
    TV announcement

    Script:

    Come enjoy Portland's annual sand castle competition, Sand in the City, July 20-22. Join us at Pioneer Square for food, fun and festivities perfect for all ages. Bring the kids and enjoy the Children's Inspiration Village and live entertainment while viewing the beautiful sand sculptures. Visit sandinthecitypdx.org for more information.

    20 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    This is to be more amusing... thoughts..? Daisy

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8010/script-recording-32240.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Daisy, you have a clear strong voice, and you have great articulation. As far as your performance, your reading was a bit flat. I think you have to put a bit of enthusiasm and emotion to the read. You show a lot of promise, good luck

    Teg

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Building Announcement

    Script:

    MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION! - MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION !
    This is the building management. A situation currently exists that requires everyone to immediately exit the building. Please remain calm and follow the exit signs directing you to the emergency stairwell exit on the EAST side of the building and relocate to the Huntington Park. Please do not use the middle stairwell and do not attempt to use the elevators. Do not re-enter the building unless instructed to do so. Thank You.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 6 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Building Management

    Script:

    MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION! - MAY I HAVE YOUR ATTENTION !
    This is the building management. A situation currently exists that requires everyone to immediately exit the building. Please remain calm and follow the exit signs directing you to the emergency stairwell exit on the EAST side of the building and relocate to the Huntington Park. Please do not use the middle stairwell and do not attempt to use the elevators. Do not re-enter the building unless instructed to do so. Thank You.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on a recording of this script that one of your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Contractor Slated for Demolition!

    Script:

    Good Morning. Welcome! This morning I want to give you a brief overview of our company and talk about how to work safely in your jobs. But first let’s go around the room and introduce ourselves. I’ll start.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 3 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Golden Gate Bridge 75th Anniversary-Wells Fargo

    Script:

    May 27, 1937. As evening descends to a chorus of oohs and aahs, where the night before stood only blackness, an icon of human accomplishment now illuminates the sky, and a new era of connectivity and commerce is ushered in with celebration and fireworks.

    It was at that moment that the Golden Gate Bridge became an integral part of Bay Area life, as it remains to this day; an every day reminder that the Bay Area is a place where nothing is impossible, and dreams become reality.

    The Golden Gate Bridge and Wells Fargo each continue to play leading roles in the growth and development of the Bay Area, and we're honored to help bring the celebrations of the Golden Gate Bridge 75th Anniversary to life.

    To Learn more, visit ggb75.wellsfargo.com.

    The Golden Gate Bridge and Wells Fargo - built in the Bay Area.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 5 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Narration for Marching Band Competitions

    Script:

    1. (Very polite) The authority would like to remind the citizens to only perform music that utilizes major and minor scales, and to avoid dissonance and improvisation of any kind. Thank you.
    2. (Mildly frustrated) At this time, the authority would like to remind the citizens to only play music that was written before the year 1900. Thank you.
    3. (Quite Agitated) The authority would like to remind the citizens that the use of complex rhythms and contemporary music is strictly prohibited. Those who continue to disobey the authority will be punished accordingly.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on a recording of this script that one of your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Not Exactly "Determined to Survive"

    Script:

    The cockroach grew tired of the repeated attempts of over emphasis on her struggle - to not only survive a nuclear war, but to deal with the involvement of humans. She wished they would soon all perish. For all they wanted was Professorial delivery without any radiation rescue. So she decided they could tolerate no more and moved her babies far away. And took up with a cricket.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on a recording of this script that one of your peers recorded.

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    Pre boarding announcement

    Script:

    Good afternoon passengers. This is the pre-boarding announcement for flight 89B to Rome. We are now inviting those passengers with small children, and any passengers requiring special assistance, to begin boarding at this time. Please have your boarding pass and identification ready. Regular boarding will begin in approximately ten minutes time. Thank you.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 5 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

    Back to top

    13 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    I have a blue snowball mic. How does it sound?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/goldengate2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good for just a snowball mic. Good overall performance. Keep up the good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good volume. The mic does a good job of capturing the mid-tones but seems to roll off the high and bottom. I'm not familiar with the Snowball so I'm not sure what it's intended characteristics are.

    Back to top

    59 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/narrativeaudition.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice quality. Performance wise, the second take is definitely better - more conversational and fluid You may want to get some sort of editing software to remove mic handling noise and breaths - actually the mic should be stand mounted preferably with shock mount and/or possibly using low frequency roll off.

    Back to top

    94 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lexaboo757's recording

    This is the first time I have recorded anything. I am extremely new to the profession, so don't hold back on the constructive criticism. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105475/script-recording-83121.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lexaboo,,

    Great voice ! Definitely sounds like narration is your niche. Pacing , and breathing a little hurried, but enunciation was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording makes you seem kind of far away, I would experiment with mic placement and maybe a little bit of sound baffling!

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice resonant voice. I'd like to see more range and softness. For example, there is too much emphasis on the "and" before 'any passengers'. Too much stress on "Please" ...it sounded like a plea. Boarding a flight can be stressful, and announcement ideally help bring calm. Lastly, the word "approximately" was garbled. If anyone is a non-native English speaker, they might not hear that work correctly.

    Peer Feedback:

    nice voice. smooth, nice tone. You sounded too far from the mic, or maybe you used a special effect to make it sound more like a live announcement. It sounded like a live announcement, like you were a stewardess, and had just made an announcement. You died out at the end of the recording. Stay strong and purposeful to the end, even with the "thank, you". We'd love to hear more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a guess, but it sounds like you're in a live room and a little distant from the mic. Could also be that the mic is of a lesser quality than you would need for VO.

    This copy is what is categorized as "live announce" in VO parlance - like the Academy Awards or something, so it's not really meant to be recorded (unless it's for something like a VO inserted into a movie or TV show).

    At any rate, it needs to sound welcoming (unless the director actually wants it to sound like the announcer is tired or bored). Big smile.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the quality of your voice and think that you have the potential to do well. Your pacing was good, but you seemed to have dropped off at the end, with "Thank you".

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all so much for your feedback. I actually recorded this using my mac w/ no mic at all and in the smallest room in my home w/o any sound baffling equipment. With the comments you all have given me, I have taken the initiative to purchase some equipment and make my dream a reality. This is truly a helpful tool and I'm glad to have found this site.

    Back to top

    76 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Richard.Hawks's recording

    Looking for constructive criticism and feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-81188/script-recording-93066.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Not necessarily a critique. But I'm always baffled when people choose this script. In all of my travels, I cannot ever recall a recorded boarding announcement. They're usually done live at the gate. Sometimes warnings for flights are recorded, I guess.

    The only other thing I can think of is if this were a VO added in the background of a film.

    For what it is though, it's kind of serviceable as boarding instruction. Maybe just warm it up a little and be more welcoming. I'm sure that the airlines train their employees who do the boarding announcements in doing just that as representatives of the company. They don't want them to sound bored or like they're just going through the motions.

    Back to top

    83 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rimasden@gmail.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111773/script-recording-87801.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It is only my personal prejudice, but I have a problem with this particular piece of copy. Unless it is used for background noise in a film, TV show or video game, I'm not sure that this is strictly VO. It's more of a "live announce" type thing - something an airline employee would say over the intercom in an actual pre-boarding situation. Personally, I have never taken a flight from anywhere where there has been a recorded pre-boarding announcement (although there are prerecorded safety instructions once on the plane).

    However, if you accept the premise that this is a "walla" type recording for a film, TV show or video game, then it may need a friendlier, more welcoming tone. Contrarily, if the director so chooses, he/she may want a bored and rote type of delivery. It depends on what the scene calls for.

    There is a considerable amount of mouth noise and plosive popping. The other thing is, the voice is too soft, volume delivery wise as well as a breathier quality. Most pre-boarding announcements I have heard (given the fact that they are done over an intercom system with poorer audio quality than a recording studio), the speaker has to rise above the other noises in the terminal to be heard and understood. So they tend to speak loudly and with a more "pointed" sound - the voice placed further to the front of the mouth rather than throaty. And, of course, if it was indeed intended as background noise, the sound engineers would add that "intercom" sound processing effect, so you (as the voice actor) would have to give "more voice" for them to work with as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello James.

    Just an FYI, my last 4 trips to Europe (all on Iceland Air mind you) all had a prerecorded safety and boarding audio announcement and the flight attendants just mimed the instructions. I actually found myself paying attention to it as I found it interesting because it was done in 4 languages. I was wondering if this was something what was done one a daily or weekly basis as some of the recording seemed seemed very pertinent to our flight, but I am very confident it was prerecorded. New market!

    Peer Feedback:

    Didn't know that. Interesting.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you James for your feedback. Shall work on my voice on all the points that you've mentioned.

    Back to top

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear RReid's recording

    This is my first submission for peer review (the other one never loaded properly) so I would love your feedback on the read. Please ignore the recording quality at this time as I have not set up a home studio. Thank you so much in advance. I look forward to reading your comments.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-89349/script-recording-73610.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    For a script like this, I don't think there needs to be anything other than a straight plain delivery as it is merely an announcement. A friendly delivery is probably better but I can't really imagine anywhere that this script would be used as a paid gig. Therefore, I'm not sure how to critique this as you could had given any sort of delivery and it would have worked.

    Was there a particular style of delivery you were going for? Any particular setting, mood, or character you wanted to give off? If there was something specific you wanted to depict in your read I could give feed back on whether you achieved your goal or not but otherwise the only thing I can really say is "you read English very fluently."

    Regards,
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    This script is in the script library, but I'm not at all sure why. These Pre-Boarding announcements are usually made live at the gate - not as a VO, as opposed to the inflight instructions which many times is a VO to a video. At least that has been my airport/airline travel experience. And as such, I have heard every kind of delivery from perky to uncomfortable to exasperated to just plain bored. This one lies somewhere in the middle.

    It's a matter of tone. It needs to be welcoming with a smile. This pretty much sounds like you're reading from a 3x5 index card.

    I agree with John. Unless you work for the airline, this will more than likely never be a paid VO gig.

    I would suggest that you pick something genre specific to VO - commercial, narration, character, etc. - to practice with. We would be more able to possibly give you feedback more useful to that genre.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought your pacing and delivery sounded great. Besides these, it's clarity and precision you are aiming for and you pretty much hit the target. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounded like every pre-boarding announcement I ever heard, by which I mean I think you got the right tone. My only nit pick is you said "ta" for "to" (to Rome), something I have to practice a lot.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you John, James, Arlen and Mimi for taking the time out to give me your thoughts. They were all excellent! Thank you.

    Best,
    Robyn

    Back to top
    printer friendly version edit
    The Unveiling of the Ferrari F-12 Berlinetta

    Script:

    It is the fruit of a huge amount of work and passion
    and incorporates our most innovative technologies
    working with the best technological partners in the world.

    This is an extraordinarily high performance car.

    It’s 740 horsepower, in fact
    make it the most powerful road car Ferrari has ever built.

    Aside from performance, our other focus was weight reduction.
    Using aluminum to produce a car
    that’s not only more rigid and therefore safer
    but also more compact and very, very light.

    Efficiency was another area in which we concentrated
    And the result is a car that has made huge strides
    in terms of fuel consumption and emissions.

    Each and every detail has been
    meticulously designed and executed.

    It brims with personality and innovative styling
    developed with the aid of intensive wind tunnel testing,

    The result is a very beautiful car.
    Here is the F12 Berlinetta.

    Recordings:

    Hear and comment on 3 recordings of this script that your peers recorded.

    How to Reach Us

    Call us 888-321-3343
    Email us training@edgestudio.com

    Click for Edge location information...

    Meet Your Coaches

    Edge Alumni Work Everyday

    Get free educational
    voice over newsletters!

    Get free, educational voice over newsletters

    Where should we send them?