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Script Genres > English Adult > Narration > Corporate

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    10,000 Feet Insight

    Script:

    The poster tool in 10,000 Feet Insights is a dynamic way to organize and present the content in your Insights projects. Each poster links directly to the content in your account, which allows you or your viewers to easily dive deep into specific areas of interest. You can use Posters to pitch new ideas, create a visual table of contents, or present final deliverables. Let’s see how it works.

    Add the Poster Tool to any group or sub group in your project, just like the other tools in 10,000 Feet Insights. I’m going to build a poster to update our client on Phase 4 of the printer project.

    118 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear uberwilhelm's recording

    Very new and trying to figure out where I need to improve. Many thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-103997/script-recording-87472.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First off, the delivery is a bit brisk. As a result, you stumble over some words and they either get slurred or somewhat muddled. Slow it down. I take it that this is an explainer video. There are no extra points for racing to the finish line.

    There is a constant fuzz and a hint of electronic hum underlying the recording, The first is likely coming from a relatively untreated sound deadened space. And the second from cabling or another electronic device in close proximity to the microphone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello James.

    I was even consciously trying to slow down! Will still work on it. I think that fuzz is the sound pf the PC on the other side of the wall. As for the hum, I'm not sure. The closest electronic thing (with the exception of the headphones) to the mic is maybe 3 feet away. I will do some testing and see what I can figure out. Many thanks

    Peer Feedback:

    Commercials usually have a time constraint - 10, 15, 20, 30, 45, 90 seconds.

    Explainer Narration, audiobooks and such, not so much.

    So the task is to move it along, but still engage the listener. So slowing the delivery reinforces the key points, especially with an instructional-type narration.

    I have heard over and over again (as far as audiobook narration goes) that even if you think you're going too slow, it's still not slow enough. Sometimes you have to experiment to find that "sweet spot" where your narration is comfortable to say and be understood clearly by your listener.

    The hum might be coming from your computer's proximity or from a florescent lighting fixture. The fuzz may be from the computer fan.

    Peer Feedback:

    Is there any kind of "industry standard" for something like words per minute when it comes to narration or some sort of parameter or guideline that I can aim for?

    Peer Feedback:

    No. It's more of a "feel" than a standard. There are no hard and fast rules. You kind of have to put on your objective listener hat.

    Of course, if the narration has to time out with scenes of a video or PowerPoint presentation, you'll more than likely get that information along with the script.

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    3 Com

    Script:

    A few decades ago 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology for networking personal computers. Today, 3Com is a company that maintains its leadership role with innovative solutions spanning the scope of communications. From the global enterprise to the neighborhood business, from the Internet point of presence to the home office, 3Com systems and products put computing resources within easy reach of millions of users worldwide. 3Com combines cutting edge research and development with world-class manufacturing facilities, and international service and support.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DonnaCookVO's recording

    2 takes-which is better? The first take is supposed to be conversational, the second more energetic.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123263/script-recording-95254.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First off - The recording quality leaves a lot to be desired, It sounds like you are in a very tight space - maybe with one of those portabooth kind things? - and your voice is very muffled. Also a lot of "thumping", like you're moving around or inadvertently hitting the surface that your mic is placed on. BUT, that's not all that important right now.

    "Conversational" is one of those VO buzzwords that can often be kind of vague. The going buzzword now is "real". Even though you're obviously reading from a prepared script (and that's what it sounds like here), what's being asked for is something like a normal conversation. That kind of means answering unasked questions. Something like this:

    ME: So, what's the story?
    YOU: (Well) A few decades ago 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology for networking personal computers.
    ME: Well, that was then. What about now?
    YOU: Today, 3Com is a company that maintains its leadership role with innovative solutions spanning the scope of communications.
    ME: How far reaching is 3Com?
    YOU: From the global enterprise to the neighborhood business, from the Internet point of presence to the home office, 3Com systems and products put computing resources within easy reach of millions of users worldwide.
    ME: Sounds great! What else can 3Com offer me?
    YOU: 3Com combines cutting edge research and development with world-class manufacturing facilities, and international service and support.

    This is also a "Once Upon A Time" kind of story. And with VO, you're always telling a story.

    The second take is too "In Your Face". Good energy, but you're "punching" so hard that it sounds more like a cheezy used car salesman than a person who is excited about this company. What was the last thing you were excited about? do you remember how you acted and what you sounded like? In acting, that's called "sense memory". You substitute that "feeling" and transfer it to these words. Might be as simple as plastering a smile on your face and not letting it fall until you're done talking. A real bright eyed smile. Not an easy thing to do.

    Detecting a little Chicago in there?

    Peer Feedback:

    You've got a really good role playing story teller voice ! but back to business.
    The recording sounds a little bit confined indeed but that can be dealt with.
    now the first take sounds more like a CEO speech to the staff explaining what 3COM is about, that's good on it's own for an explanatory video for example, the second take is more interesting with more enthusiasm the listener can feel from your voice, with recalibrating some intonations this is the better take.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EStaton's recording

    This is a redo from last week. After receiving tremendous feedback, I have incorporated the helpful suggestions into a full week of practice recording. The ultimate goal is to shed the announcer style and sound more conversational and human. I hope this recording is a step in the right direction.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/3 Com Revisited.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice and delivery. All I would change is removing the breaths.

    Peer Feedback:

    very well done , but a quick edit can get rid of the breaths in between sentences.

    Peer Feedback:

    mmmkay...I'm not going to be as kind as the newbs. In addition to editing out the breaths mentioned by the first two, the bigger sin here is the breaking of sentences by breathing...at "millions (breath) users worldwide." You just can't do that. There's a regionalism in some of the read that you'll need to address.

    On the breathing...remember that you can edit between sentences...take a deep breath on the longer sentences so they'll flow with one consistent sound. Some of us had some fun practicing the tongue-twister "One Hen, Two Ducks" here on the forum. Try and see how far you can get through it on one breath...then try it again and see if you can improve. It's a good exercise.

    If you want to hear the regionalism I'm referring to listen to: "Nearly twenty years ago, 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology". That's just not neutral by any stretch. It's got a southern vibe to it to my ears.

    Keep working at it...no reason to think you can't get there.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your friendly, conversational tone. This script might call for a slightly more formal, corporate delivery, but your delivery here should serve you well. Keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    You've gotten lots of feedback and I have to dash off in a sec for dinner with my kiddos, but I just wanted to mention quickly that I thought it sounded very conversational and human.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback on 3 Com (take 2). Seems I'm sounding more conversational, but backing off the announcer voice does tend to reveal my southern drawl a bit more. Have been told by Edge personnel that my "taste of the South" is likely a strength, but time will tell. Thanks also for the reminders about the need to edit out the breaths inbetween sentences. Thought the music had drowned those out, but apparently not enough.

    Ed

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    3Com

    Script:

    Nearly twenty years ago, 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology for networking personal computers. Today, 3Com is a company that maintains its leadership role with innovative solutions spanning the scope of communications. From the global enterprise to the neighborhood business, from the Internet point of presence to the home office, 3Com systems and products put computing resources within easy reach of millions of users worldwide. 3Com combines cutting edge research and development with world-class manufacturing facilities, and international service and support.

    131 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EStaton's recording

    Have been working on slowing my pace down. However it still felt like a fast read....even though it wound up being 34 seconds instead of 30. Working on sounding conversational and not as much like an announcer. Look forward to and appreciate any feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/3 Com.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! E. Nice voice. You started off quite well and then there were some lines/words where you were hesitant and others quite confident; some well paced and others a bit rushed. I think with a voice like yours, you have great potential. Best/

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,
    I agree with Arlen's comments. Your voice sounds great. I like the clarity and warmth. Still, the pacing is too fast. (Who says this is a :30?) Your inflection is rather flat in the first half because you're clipping along. As you slow slightly in the second half the inflection sounds more natural, inflections are better. Take your time and concentrate on a natural delivery. I agree: great potential.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great commercial voice. I agree with the above comments: slow down a bit (though I know timing is important when you have to keep it under a certain amount of time) and try to develop a more natural cadence. Try reciting this as though you were selling it to someone in person.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree the piece felt too quick. Otherwise, I liked your interpretation and I think your voice was well suited to it. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a voice that would work for this. Yes slow down a bit. and try to smooth out the rough words here and there. Also try smiling a bit. It will come though better.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi E, I agree, so somewhat more of the same. Great sound, but the pace was off. Try reading it as though you are sharing information with a friend.
    I don't think this copy would be a :30 commercial anyway....more like an introductory piece at a tradeshow or on a website. The pacing suggestions I have gotten that were helpful include doing what feels natural, and then tightening up the pauses in the edit. If you know it has to be a certain length, you can always practice with a timer.
    Best of luck!
    Cynthia

    Peer Feedback:

    Radio guy? You have a definite announcer sound to your delivery. You also over-articulate a few times but the thing to work most on from this read is speed. This was just zipped through in a very impersonal approach. Another thing you'll want to watch is a very announcer-like habit of trailing your sentences off like you did at "scope of communicatiooonnnns"...gives you away.

    Voice is there. Kill the announcer and bring the human out.

    EDIT: Funny Linda's critique wasn't showing when I posted last evening. Interesting choice of coach since her specialty is accent acquisition and elimination. She IS a seasoned professional. I like what she had to say.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks to everyone for their feedback on my recording. It has been a huge help and has served as a foreceful reminder to work on shedding the "announcer' voice. Yes that is my background and it sure does like to present itself when the mic is turned on.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/3Com.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice. I would like to hear a little more fluctuation of tone and pitch.Quality is good! And maybe a smidge faster with the pauses - not much but a little faster and it will keep it moving.
    Great job!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jh10015's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/3com.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,

    I like your read, but there are a few things to consider.

    I noticed that you paused where there were no commas (before 'with' and 'within'), effectively creating a new sentences as those words are not conjunctions.
    I like to read through the script out loud to get the phrasing and breathing right before I start recording.

    Tell people to be quiet when you are recording. Either that or record in a dedicated room that has been treated in some way. There was some reverb from the room as well.

    Try removing nose, mouth and switch clicks.

    I hope those point help.
    All the best,

    Lee.

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    Advantage Technologies

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

    62 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eagleye's recording

    This time I made sure my downstairs frig and furnace were not on, and that I had plenty of water after my morning coffee!! So, I didn't have to use any Noise Reduction. From a recording quality point of view, I used my two Clear Sonic panels to form a booth. I'm using an MXL 2006 mic on a round base mic stand. During my first read the mic was straight up behind a pop filter and it picked up my every breath. So, I angled the head down and that seemed to take care of the breaths. Also, I used a Xenyx 302 USB mixer, preamp into an Acer Aspire 471p notebook. From a performance point of view, I tried to hit the company name and had to work at breath control during the list of software uses. Thank you everyone for your inputs!!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-88386/script-recording-71677.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely DONE! This is much more your style. Couple of notes. You don't have to slate. Slate for auditions. From the tech standpoint, you controlled the noise much better. It doesn't sound boxy. I also didn't hear a noise gate. A good engineer could put that into any video. Be careful, there are some big clicks in your recording. look at the waveform, anything funny, cut it out or redo that part.
    This is much more representative of what you can do than the other clip. My 2 cents.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! This is a great fit for your voice! Your emphasis and inflection is excellent from start to finish. One thought: what action are you trying to land with the first line? It feels as if you're hitting all the right notes, but it could be more specific and engaging--think about who you're talking to, and why.

    Peer Feedback:

    You Have a great voice for this type narrative. The speed seemed a good pace. The hits were in good places but, I felt, a little strong rather than just raising the voice pitch on the hits. I noted your comments regarding mic placement. I have my mic on an arm that I adjust to a position at 45-degrees above my mouth and 45-degrees to one side or the other with the mic pointing down at my mouth behind a pop filter. I find this position helps control any pops, breathing, and mouth clicks that would later mean more editing time. articulation of some words fade such as in "employee" and "software". it could sound a little more personable. I have issues with that, too. You're in the zone - Great read!

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    Advantage Technologies

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

    53 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear smalltalk's recording

    This is my first attempt at adding music. Open to feedback/suggestions on performance and audio quality. Thanks all!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9551/script-recording-53054.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'll offer up that this is louder than I thought. You might want to adjust your speakers. Sorry...Cynthia

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your tone fits this script nicely: enthusiastic yet not too informal. Good read.

    Peer Feedback:

    The pacing was good. The music is too prominate and the vocals are very loud. Again, your pace was appropirate and you have a nice voice.

    I havent had much practice with music either.
    Good luck with everything!

    Jen

    Peer Feedback:

    I would have selected music that was a litte more laid back. Enjoyed the read.. Seems a little too much of a pause after this software as if there was a comma there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all: I appreciate you catching the pause after "software", and Randye, the air loss at the ends of some words. I think "smoothing it out" is the technique of the week! As for the technical glitches, I didn't spend a lot of time choosing the music since I really wanted to practice laying the bed and trying to get the mix right. It has a way to go, but now I have specific things to work on -- matching volume, for one!

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    Advantage Technology (take 2)

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    took the early feedback from first posting of Advantage Technology and made some adjustments ...created a thicker pop filter to soften my plosives, went for a more upbeat me in slate, tried to fix hum, did not edit out breaths to allow for more 'gaps'....let me know if you notice a difference...hopefully an improved one...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105999/script-recording-85682.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Seems like you've corrected the hum and the popping.

    However, there were a couple of other issues crept in compared to the previous recording.

    I hear a lot of rustling - paper and/or clothing. Are you sitting down? Are you moving around? Are you holding the script? And you sound a little distant from the mic.

    As far as the read: The previous iteration had much more personality and warmth. This one sounded like you were reading from a script that someone has underlined or highlighted certain words that they wanted punched. It was a bit forced. Did you picture a specific person in your mind to whom you were talking? For instance: How would you tell this story (which is basically what this copy is) to your best friend over the phone?

    Take the third sentence for example. You hit "success" twice. I would submit that that particular word is secondary (since it appears twice close together) to the comparison built into the sentence "YOUR success ... the success of this COMPANY." - the "You are the backbone of this Company" kind of rah, rah, rah thing. Also there was an odd stress on "...benefit PACKAGES..." I would submit that that term is a singular thing, or at least a certain kind of package - BENEFIT packages as opposed to GROCERY packages or CHRISTMAS packages.

    Sometimes it may be beneficial to reformat the words on the page to separate thoughts and concepts. It tricks the brain to keep from just plowing through it. How would you have read it if the script looked like this?

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated,
    And to the excitement and challenges of a growing business.

    As a new employee, your job is important to us.
    Your success is an important factor in the success of this Company.

    This Software is designed to offer you Accurate Information about:
    Company Policies and Procedures,
    Benefit Packages,
    Performance Reviews,
    Training, and
    Education Opportunities.

    If you think of a single paragraph as containing a thought clump, How does a welcome message, a job description (of sorts) and the software explanation fit into a single thought clump? One thought doesn't flow smoothly into the next, they require a little separation. Script breakdown.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great coaching comments! Yes, I was not thinking as much on what I was saying the 2nd time as I was hoping the plosives and hum were gone. Yes, I was sitting holding my paper...and realized the rustling will be picked up. Will use a music stand or copy stand next time. Wonder if I sounded farther because of the extra layers of nylon or if I was doing it off axis because of the plosives...could the gain level on the interface effect the loudness as well? Ill have to play with that...Funny, as soon as I hit success the second time I knew it didn't feel right...will work on it again, and incorporate your suggestions...will probably post another piece that is more 1st person prose...or some other kind of narration after this one. Thank you jamesromick!

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    Advantage Technology Take 3

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities

    95 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    In this version I made some changes based on the previous feedback I had received...I hope the hum & plosives are still better than Take 1, and now I hope I used the notes to make clearer choices for the persona of the copy...thank you for listening and your feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105999/script-recording-85686.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    69 plays so far and no one else chimed in? I'm feeling like it's just you and me here!

    Anyway: Of the three, this one incorporates the better bits of the other two.

    You're closer to finding the "sweet spot" in mic proximity and plosive control - still just a little P popping, especially in the last sentence. Making your own pop screens was a great idea - saves money. And you are correct in thinking that it does effect (dull) the sound a bit. You just have to keep experimenting with angles and proximity. It's a lot to concentrate on, but another trick some people do is to tilt their head away from the mic slightly (up, down, sideways) just before they say a plosive - those who do have made it kind of second nature, they do it without even thinking about it.

    It sounds to me like you read from my the reformatted script - I hear the pauses. Good for an editor if he or she is matching up the words with something like a PowerPoint presentation. However, it also makes the delivery a little herky-jerky - in that it doesn't flow in a (say it with me) "conversational" manner. It may only be a matter of pulling back on the vocal intensity (the "less voice" comment I made earlier) and not hitting the points as hard. Again, think of saying somethng this to your best friend over the phone - or only about 6 inches away from someone's ear.

    I would suggest setting this aside for now and attacking another piece of copy. There comes a point of diminishing returns if you obsess over one thing (or one piece of copy) for too long. (Ask me how I know that.)

    Peer Feedback:

    Felt the same way after hearing it again. I am going to step away from this one for awhile and work on something else in narration. So true you can overwork a piece. Though I am pleased to know you could hear some changes even if they are not the best ones yet...but I am understanding what needs to be done (especially the conversational quality) so I will seek material that might help me tap into that better. Will work on getting more familiar with my mic and reducing plosives. Meanwhile jamesromick thank you for all the good notes n tips...if you work for Edge I want you to be one of my professional Edge coaches when I prep for my demo!!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    If your phone has the capability, just record yourself talking about nothing at all with a friend and listen back to it (or call someone you know while you're in your studio and record your end of the call). You'll hear the "conversational" delivery in that normal one-to-one interaction. You might also just throw in a few lines of copy and ask that person what they think. (Of course, they will tell you it sounds wonderful - friends are like that - and you'll have a great laugh at it all.) Also take careful notice of your vocal tone, volume and inflections. It's very enlightening.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great delivery. There would be visuals in this so your delivery makes putting this to video really easy. I would probably ask you to read a bit faster in a couple of parts, but overall nice clean read. Good job!

    Danny

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Danny! Working on a new piece, a prose narration. Hope you'll listen when I post for feedback!

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Oliver's recording

    OK--so here is another go at this narration that I did in October--looking for how I can improve the read--I want it believable, professional, yet engaging and approachable. No need to sugar coat--had enough Halloween Candy! Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-0/script-recording-24350.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounded like you were reading instead of telling. What I would do to get in the right tone and mood for this one is to picture a new employee or a small group of new employees that you're standing in front of and welcoming them into the company. Start by saying, "Can I have your attention for a moment. Good morning everyone, I'm Oliver. Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated..."
    This has always worked for me. It's like a singer with a pitch pipe finding the right key with which to begin.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good recording quality.
    I see that you had lot of good advise from your last read and perhaps as a result, the sing song quality has been fixed.
    I prefer the tone of your earlier read. I think it sound better if you keep the earlier tone and the current pace.
    There appears to be an abrupt rush when you start to say, "This software...". Maybe pausing to stress the "This software" would help correct this.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nelson and Jothi20, Much thanks for taking the time to listen and comment on these reads will go again and incorporate your thoughts and suggestions.

    Larry

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Rodriguez's recording

    Back in my regular space, so I'm mainly looking for performance feedback this time. Though any constructive advice is helpful.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-124840/script-recording-99522.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I work in HR and have done many employee orientations, so my feedback is coming from that lens. When new employees start at a company, they are anxious, excited, and nervous. What will the company be like? What will my coworkers be like? This elearning would be their first taste and welcome to the company. What kind of culture does this company have?

    From your recording, it sounds like the company is very matter of fact and buttoned up. What if you tried reading this like you were welcoming someone to Google? Or Zappos.com? I would like to hear more warmth and smile.

    Also, my coach once told me that whenever you say Welcome, make sure it really sounds welcoming. Try using your arm to gesture even!

    I thought your recording quality was clear and crisp.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've spent a lot of time on the receiving end of these sorts of training/instruction online tools. You've got a good voice for this, one that people can listen to for an hour (not always the case!). In one of the preliminary Edge seminars, the coach instructed the class to visualize an actual person we would be speaking to when reading the script (an American Airlines promo). We had to envision the place and the time, to put ourselves in the moment. This might work in your case. Think of a recent new job, or first job. What would you have wanted to hear on that first day of orientation? Echoing Brittany's comments above, give it some warmth and character and the audience may forget they are listening to a recorded webinar.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Let em fly!!!!!!! Thanks!!! Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17894/script-recording-49957.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I want back to losten to some of your other recordings and read some of the comments.

    Definately invest in a pop filter.

    You're going to get this one a lot. Who are you talking to? Pick ONE person - a friend, a colleague, Mom, Dad - and talk to him or her. Make them feel special. Smile.

    Peer Feedback:

    What James said. Pretty standard cumulative response....pick one personal target, smile.

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities. (from Edge Script Library)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    Just recently received my recording equipment so I am practicing with it. Looking for feedback on my delivery mostly, but also if the recording quality sounds good.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105999/script-recording-85678.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it. I have online classes, and your delivery sounds the way it is typically produced.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you dwash85! I appreciate the time and comment very much.

    Peer Feedback:

    There is a soft hum underlying the recording. Might be that your mic is close to another electronic device or you may have a bad or loose cable.

    Lots of plosive popping - P's, hard C's, F's and some T's. Could be lessened by using a pop screen - and if you are using one, you might consider working off-axis to the mic so that the puffs of air go past the diaphragm rather than directly into it.

    Slating: It is important that your name be understood (which it is here), but also that you enjoy saying it and have your personality come out. One coach suggested using a slight shoulder shrug and/or a tilt of the head as you slate. It just seems to warm it up a little.

    Following the slate, leave a beat (about the timing of taking a breath) before you start into the copy - just to set it off. This sounded like you were welcoming Monique Bagwell to Advantage Technologies.

    Editing breaths: This is probably the beginning of a new employee training video. So, there's probably more to the story. There is also no real time constraint like for commercials - the VO will more than likely be synced up to a video presentation of some kind, maybe a PowerPoint. So it's important to sound like it's a "conversation" even if the breath sounds are edited out. The listener still needs to "feel" the breath and the pauses between thoughts and sentences. Without those slight pauses, it feels and sounds like one run-on sentence. If you edit out breath sounds, Don't just leave the shortened wave form. Fill the gaps with room tone for pacing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks jamesromick! You found my concerns...my plosives!!!! I'm working on softening those up...comes from my theatre training...Love the comment about my slate sounding as if I was working for the company and the note on how to avoid that....Yes, you are right, I edited out my breaths so much so that I don't sound like I even breathed! Good point that it might be part of an employee training video...the hum probably is caused by my mic sitting so close to my interface or just poor environmental control. I'm surrounded by ambient noise. Haven't found a good location to set up shop in my home.... I am going to work on this again taking into account your notes. I hope you will listen to it when I re-post to see if I applied any of your notes.

    Peer Feedback:

    I come from a theatre background myself. One of the things that we stage folk have to adjust to is the intimacy of VO recording - we don't have to play to the upper mezzanine. I often hear from coaches and instructors in seminars, "Give me less voice."

    Pop filters aren't fool proof, but here is a link to a pop filter that I have found very effective. The dual layer design really diffuses the puffs of air.
    https://www.editorskeys.com/products/recording-equipment/dual-layer-pop-...
    The same effect could be achieved by placing two regular cheap pop screens in front of each other.

    I also work off-axis - meaning that I don't have the mic directly in front of my mouth but at about a 45 - 60 degree angle off to the side and about 4 - 6 inches away (that "hang five" distance). If I'm auditioning at a studio, I will oftentimes angle my head slightly away from the mic to avoid popping. That way the puffs of air of the plosives go past the mic rather than directly into it. In combination with the pop screen, it eliminates 90% - 95% of my plosive popping. Good micing technique will take care of the rest.

    There are times when eliminating the breath sounds and butting one sentence (or thought) up against another is called for. Commercial copy (mostly radio spots) that require you to squeeze a lot of words into a fixed time frame. (Sometimes copy writers over-write for the spot and they find out later that things need to be cut.) But to have a "natural conversational flow" to the copy, it's important to at least have the "feel" of the breath. The listener gets uncomfortable, even though they may not know why - especially with long form narration. A lot of software (Audacity is one) "ripples" the waveform shorter if you snip something out (like a breath) - it doesn't leave the "gap" where the breath was. What a sound engineer will do is replace that space with room tone (not silence) to fill that void - although it may be shortened or tightened up for pacing, but that "feel" of space and separation is in there.

    Your recording environment seems to be pretty quiet and your proximity to the mic seems good. The hum is something that needs to be looked into if you intend to produce (even auditions) from your home studio.

    Peer Feedback:

    jamesromick I used one of my knee high nylons on my pop filter and wrapped it over twice! So it is much thicker and I really heard a difference in my plosives, especially my 'p'. I am also trying to see if the hum might be coming from my computer cord so I gave it a little lift using a plug 'converter?' from 3 to 2 prong. Although I am not in my kitchen, my appliances are on the other side of the wall with a pass through window close by which may be picking up some interference...you obviously have been doing this for a really long time to guess I must be using audacity, which is why my pause lacked a decent gap when edited. Next time, I will post it without edits...hope you will give feedback again when I do. I am also learning a lot from reading your comments on other folks recordings. Many thanks!!!

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Gathering and recording some material in the corporate media type recordings. How does this sound to you? Thanks always for your feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27538.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    Good to hear from you! Like the script, very corporate sounding yet friendly too. Recording quality was clear, as I can see the new sound editing is working well.

    I enjoy your scripts, as you have a great voice for this industry. Wanted to ask you, a friend purchased a microphone for me as a birthday present. I received it today and I'm using Audacity for editing, but it has a lot of static on my Desktop PC, but minimal on my mini-laptop. Have you had any issues with static while using Audacity and what would you recommend? As I've tried several steps, but nothing seems to be working and would like to start recording with new microphone.

    Once again, good read, well done! Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks a lot, I figure my market is this kind of stuff. I mean, I live in Spain right? Not getting any AUDI commercials! Maybe TxTom or Gerry Lino Or Sabrinasvoice!
    I'd be happy to give you as much as i know about what you need. I have some ideas though and would be happy to help you. email me @ nodo420(at)ono.com and we can set something up. Thanks again for taking the time to comment!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo.....REALLY liked this recording....you absolutely have a great delivery for this genre. One tiny little criticism....in "...job is important to us," the' to' came out as' ta'. I remember one of my Edge coaches cautioning me about this....a minor minor technicality,,,,,GREAT READ!!

    Peer Feedback:

    You're a trip kid ! Well I was just tooling around in my G5 and thought to myself " Hey , I wonder what new postings are up in the forum ". I'm glad I checked in. Great piece here man !! Nice pace , relaxed , casual style , yet all business. And I could here the smile in your voice as well. Job well done Brudda !!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Jerry and Marianna. What a great catch Marianna, The TA... Ya, I am pretty decent and have worked at my 'relaxed reading" for that Non Reading sound that you guys do so naturally. Based on where I am, this will probably be the type of work I'd get. So when I look at my portfolio (small as it may be) there is commercial, commercial, more commercial. No Corporate narratives. So I'm going to try some of this and see if I can't get enough material for a demo. (I was secretly hoping this was good enough for that!) Thanks for all the feedback... Brudder! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Also really liked your audition in this week's contest....good luck!!!

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear odetofross@yahoo.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7195/script-recording-59908.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You should put more inflection on the company name it sounds like an afterthought. the word excitement sounds unexciting. the point of the script is to convince someone that you care but it sounds like you are going through the motions at times. i think you have a lovely voice though. very appealing. also you should pause at every comma. That's what a comma means. hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    thank you Mikeivy!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, not a bad read at all. Business-like and yet with a welcoming sound. I do have a quibble about your reading and/or editing in the sentence that starts "This software.."

    The pauses here sound odd or unnatural. It really breaks the flow of the sentence. Long pause at the first comma and then shorter pauses at the others. It sounds like you either edited out some breaths and didn't edit the flow well enough or maybe punched in a phase unevenly. That's really the only thing that stuck out to me.

    You don't have to pause at every comma. While they may create correct sentence structure in print, we oft times SPEAK through them. Periods are the end of a sentence and that's different, but not every comma creates the need for an audible pause. No hard set rule on commas.

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    Advantage Technology

    Script:

    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psunderwood's recording

    New microphone: AKG C214. How do we sound together? Any comments on the recording per se (too quiet, background noise...)? Any comments about the read (as nit-picky as you want to be)? Any general or specific suggestions?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Advantage Technology.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your performance. What are you using for software & mic?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, jh10015. The microphone is an AKG C214. That's plugged into a Behringer Eurorack UB1204FX-PRO mixer, which outputs to a Delta 410 sound card. The software is Audacity version 2.0.2 running on a Windows XP desktop.

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to go get my kid from school, but just quickly I'd said it sounded really nice, I liked your understated yet still warm delivery, and the recording was a little quiet to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Tonia. It looks like it peaks at a shade under -12 db as is. I'll adjust my signal chain to get it a little hotter.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice sound. I have the same mic. It works well with your voice.

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    Aetna Select Choice Plan

    Script:

    The benefits and services available to you as a member of the Select Choice plan have been designed with your personal health in mind. Our goal is to provide you and your family with convenient, comprehensive health services, and to protect you from the high cost of both routine preventive care and major illness. Please keep your Select Choice Member Card with you. The number on the card is your member number. You may be asked for this number when seeking services from Select Choice providers, and when calling Aetna Health Plans with questions relating to your coverage.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sherri.gray's recording

    Very first attempt at recording, editing and uploading so all feedback is welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-124986/script-recording-96079.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice pacing. Clear pleasant voice. Great recording.

    I checked, and "preventative" is indeed a word. :)

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    Aflac

    Script:

    As health care costs have escalated, so has the demand for AFLAC's products. To meet that need, we have continued to develop new insurance products and to enhance existing policies. At the same time, we have expanded our distribution system of agencies and sales associates. We have also aggressively promoted the AFLAC brand through effective advertising.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Patrick Kamler's recording

    Working on scripts that pertain to the fields where I feel I am most marketable. Also, I'd like to hear how my home studio sounds. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/AFLAC VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording sounds good, as does your pronunciation. I think your read here needs some work though— it feels rushed and slightly aggressive.

    Think about the meaning and the tone the words are trying to convey, and what the subtext of AFLAC is— reliable and trustworthy? Who are you speaking to? Not "insurance customers"— that's too vague— who can you think of speaking with that will evoke the emotion that you need to connect with your read? A good friend or a family member?

    Think about where you're speaking to this person, what time of year it is. Transport yourself there, and then use the read to take me, the listener, to that emotional place. Congrats on the studio, and keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording space sounds good.

    Your delivery in this read is announcery and impersonal. It's also a little choppy. That can be smoothed out. However, where you need to pay attention first and foremost is your diction. I am going to disagree with your first commenter about your pronunciation sounding good. As part of pronunciation, comes clarity and diction. In rushing your read, you also slurred over some of the words at "so has the demand" and "expanded our distribution system" to the point it becomes difficult to understand clearly.

    The advice always given is to consider who you're 'talking to' and not 'reading to' and do so as you're doing so to a close friend or wife or sibling. To me, this sounds as if you were doing your best to sound like an announcer. Lose that mindset and speak to a close friend instead. See how that sounds to you.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think if you slowed down a bit you would smoothen it out. I think your diction and pronunciation is fine except at "so has the demand". This would more than likely be a 30 sec spot, so you have lots of time to play around with dynamics in your delivery. Good job overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would agree to slow your pace a bit. Imagine you are speaking to one person to and you will be able to convey the message with more impact.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would recommend slowing down a bit as it seemed a bit rushed. "So has the demand" sounds like you blended all of the words together (slower and this would be pronounced separately) Also, sound like you edited out breaths and it is definitely noticeable. Your sound is good for this read, just work on diction and speed.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lukky Salas's recording

    The first time I submitted this file, it was roundly criticized. I'm trying again! Please check the sound of the mic as well as my delivery. Thanks, Lukky Salas

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/AIG.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the copy interpretation and vocal performance were both pretty good.
    I like the vocal quality but perhaps a little bit more energy.
    Recording wise, there are some issues.
    First, there is a little bit of distortion from something being over driven. With digital, it's better to leave some headroom, you don't have to pay so much with noise and, back in the day, tape was more forgiving on being over driven. Some devices have built in limiting but they can very often over do it ...so it's best usually to just back off the record level a bit.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lukky Salas's recording

    I'm still working with my new mic. How does it sound?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/AIG-2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds severely clipped. If it sounds OK to you, you need a better monitor system. It's clipping before it gets to the A/D converter. What does your recording chain look like?

    The read itself sounds shouted at me, not spoken to me. In your mind, who are you speaking to when you read this?

    Peer Feedback:

    Sundance covered it. I would try to relax and turn down your gain a little :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Your mike does sound off. I don't know why, but Sundance does. I agree that your voice is strident and is phrased in unusual ways. I think you are trying to sound authoritative and serious but it overshadows the message. Keep practicing :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I also think Sundance and others covered the evaluation quite well. I noticed a sound like a refrigerator in the background.

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    AIG

    Script:

    The Greatest Risk Is Not Taking One. They gave up everything. Their families. Their friends. Their homes. The villages they were born in. They arrived with only the clothes on their backs. Vulnerable. Scared. But brimming with hope and determined that a better life was within their grasp. Today, risk takers don't have to go after their dreams alone. They can rely on a business partner to help them through uncharted waters. An organization with unsurpassed insight and financial resources. One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking. So the next time you decide to venture into new territory for an idea you believe in, call AIG. We're best equipped to help you manage the uncertainties that go along with the pursuit of hopes and dreams.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Oliver's recording

    I know I dropped the "one" in the first sentence--hows that for an ice breaker! And some jet must have been doing recon over and close to the roof of my house-so there is one spot with a weird noise. But tell me about the read, the appropriateness of the music--how to improve it overall. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5808/script-recording-24351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Oliver, I'm on the fence with the music selection. It seemed just a bit strong and just a bit loud. Find a music bed that has more of pioneering/new horizon type of feel. The first line is in all caps, so I'd billboard it a bit without going over board. Try not projecting so much and use more of a narrative approach. You're almost there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Nelson, will look for that sound in music and tone down my projection in my next take--thanks again.

    Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    The music seemed a bit dramatic. I also felt that the tone should have been more somber.

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    AIG

    Script:

    The Greatest Risk Is Not Taking One. They gave up everything. Their families. Their friends. Their homes. The villages they were born in. They arrived with only the clothes on their backs. Vulnerable. Scared. But brimming with hope and determined that a better life was within their grasp. Today, risk takers don't have to go after their dreams alone. They can rely on a business partner to help them through uncharted waters. An organization with unsurpassed insight and financial resources. One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking. So the next time you decide to venture into new territory for an idea you believe in, call AIG. We're best equipped to help you manage the uncertainties that go along with the pursuit of hopes and dreams.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Richard Johnson's recording

    Here's one more leading into my next coaching session. Obviously my goal is to try being conversational and act like I'm not reading from the page. A work in progress. I think equipped became equipt. I also get the feeling I need to connect words together better so phrases sound smoother. This script already exists by Larry Oliver, but the "Practice Smarter" section that encourages us to upload a recording of the script didn't exist in this case.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6938/script-recording-48698.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Richard, overall, not a bad read read. Attaining the conversational feel for a read takes lots of practice. One of the keys is learning to relax during the read by imagining having a conversation with a good friend. Easier said than done, but keep at it and you'll get there. The biggest problem that I hear is choppiness, i.e., unnatural pauses in relatively short sentences. For example, the sentence "One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking". Try reading this sentence with no pauses. It may take some breath control but will sound much better. Good luck!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Think about this too. Forget the text for a moment. Think of what the main ideas are and paraphrase them for yourself outloud. It doesn't have to be a lot of sentences.

    For instance:

    "Y'know, the immigrants that came here risked a whole lot to get here and left almost everything behind to do it. Scary! But you're not alone. I've got your back. Let me help."

    Reprint the script and leave spaces for those ideas (sketch them in, put them in parethesis, whatever works for you) and record the copy again and say those ideas out loud. Then go back and just record the copy without the interjections. I'll bet you will notice a change

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Alastor Hawke's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117062/script-recording-92128.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the confidence of your read. I'd like to hear a read of this script from you where you just "read" it as if you were telling a friend about it instead of thinking "corporate messaging." Some of the pauses were a bit long - listen back and you'll hear them starting in the first line. Not many, but enough to add distraction.

    I think your voice is well-suited for this read. I'm wondering what it would sound like in a more casual, but still confident tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom. I really like your voice quality/tone and your pacing is good. I do agree with the other Tom that that's it a bit too "read" and could stand to be loosened up a bit. Also, in each sentence I think certain words (usually verbs) could get a little more attention to convey more meaning - such as "driving force", "enhance", broadening its scope", "explore" and "share".

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    Apple

    Script:

    Apple Computer began with a simple idea: That the power of computing should be available and accessible to everyone. On that premise, the personal computer revolution was launched. Our vision of empowering the individual remains the driving force behind Apple, and we continue to deliver information tools that enhance the way people work, learn, and play. Apple has grown by broadening its scope beyond the desktop computer to encompass software, printers and peripherals, portable computers, and beyond. Apple's products are designed to work the way people do, allowing them to creatively explore and share ideas. This innovative approach has resulted in the sale of more than 20 million APPLE MACINTOSH systems.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Judydee's recording

    I'm a newbie and this is my first upload to the feedback forum. How am I doing?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-57491/script-recording-57889.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Welcome, and nice work! Great first post. I liked the warm but professional feel to it. Seems like you got tired in the middle (got a little breathy and you started to slur some words a little) but you had some lists in there and I think from the sound of this you did it all in one take instead of splicing together from multiple takes. That's tough when just starting and could start to steal your breath even though one take's definitely the goal for best continuity. Try not to rush and take a little more time, especially through the middle, to let each phrase really land and have import, and you might find a little more room to breathe. (For example, compare the pace and natural feel of your first line--and the pause after it--to the slightly rushed feeling as you get to the middle.)

    Working on pacing and keeping the energy strong seems a good way to start, and there's already lots to like with the choices you made with the copy. Nice flow to many phrases. I can tell you're pretty articulate but yet you avoided getting too choppy. I liked the level of pitch variation (wasn't crazy sing-songy or flat).

    In terms of recording quality, the recording was very quiet, so when I listened with my monitors I couldn't hear enough of what was going on and had to switch to headphones. You can up the gain on your mic or preamp, or a combination of the two to get the best sound, at least you can if you have more than just a USB mic already. You might also be able to increase the volume using your software. I think folks recommend your peak volume getting to about -3db on this forum.

    When I did get the volume up enough, I could hear many plosives, or some kind of buffeting around on the mic (not constantly and mostly near the end), so look into mic placement, pop filters, et cetera to figure out best how to fix the problem for you. If you listen to your recording, you should be able to hear them, too. If you don't, then you might need better equipment to monitor your recordings so that you can coach yourself. You need to get more sound treatment in your space, too, at some point, but to my ears the recording quality is just fine for the purposes of practicing and posting. When you get it fixed, though, you'll be wowed by how much better and more professional that can make you sound.

    Nice work and see you around!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the excellent feedback, Tonia. My equipment is as new as I am and putting it all together is still a work in progress.

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't worry about getting equipment right away. Worry about performance and get feedback based on performance and see if it's what you're hoping to hear. You can make adjustments in your current situation to address some concerns (low level of file, for instance) by learning the software before buying a mic or interface.

    For a first submission, it was pretty darned good. A great foundation from which to start. Keeping a consistent delivery is important. Breathing techniques also important. Try to breath only between sentences for example. Take breaths out by either reducing the volume of just the breath or putting silence over them. (That second method is often very noticeable, by the way.)

    My first reads were through a $30 Radio Shack mic and a $50 mic interface. I did quite a few reads before I felt like it would be worth making more of an investment. Don't rush into new gear without making sure you're ready for it.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Crosier's recording

    Sorry guys...I haven't been around for a while. Lots of changes in my world. This is an audition piece I did this week. The pacing is odd because it's meant to go with video. I know it seems choppy, but that's what they needed. I would love your feedback.

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    Peer Feedback:

    OK...I missed an edit in this. Fixed it in the version being sent off.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave,

    I see the different pacing within the read, but when it comes to your voice; it's very nice and I like it!

    In listening to the read, you do have a voice for Corporation Narration and perhaps any Documentaries, as it appears very well rounded and the tone is excellent.

    In general, good job and I hope to hear more from you.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice! Really good job on the read. How did the audition go?

    Diasy

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for your support guys...I did in fact get the gig...doing the recording next week!

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    Automatic Supermarket

    Script:

    This may look like the front of a vending machine. In fact, to make a purchase, all you do is dial a code and a robot sales clerk does the rest.

    Instead of just sodas or crackers, this machine offers more than five hundred items - like panty hose, shampoos, lotions, pacifiers, tooth paste, batteries - even dog food. Need to stock up the fridge? No Problem! The automatic supermarket stocks all the essentials - eggs, milk, juices, ham, heese, yogurt, fresh fruit, cake mix, bread, rice, cereal, pasta, a variety frozen foods, and just about anything else you can think of to complete your shopping list....

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LaraHopewell's recording

    Any feedback regarding read and quality would be great.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1192/script-recording-25840.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great choice of script for you voice. Love the tone! Only thing i would change is the breath marks. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    couldnt agree more with andy. excellent in every way, except the breaths...a little distracting

    Peer Feedback:

    Great sounding voice and recording! Breaths have already been mentioned, so I can't really add much else. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't feel that the breaths are a prolem. They sound natural and right.
    Really like it!

    Peer Feedback:

    nice job! flow is great and voice smooth.

    looks like I'm the 9th person to mention the breaths; should probably edit those out to add a little polish.

    I thought you did a nice job on that long list. Sometimes it's tough to not be tedious sounding when the lists are really long. But you breezed right through it.

    again, nice job.

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    Bank E-learning 2 and 3

    Script:

    2 - As you have learned, the easiest and most efficient way to open a New Customer Session is to swipe the customer’s pin card. If the customer does not have their pin card, you can use their Checking or Savings Account number – but you must also ask for additional identification.

    3 - If you are unsure about the procedures for changing a contract’s terms and conditions, please review ‘Lesson 5: Terms and Conditions’. In this lesson, you will follow a fictional character, Renee, as she determines whether or not a contract should be modified.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear donn.collings's recording

    Hello First time posting in this feedback forum. I have recently set up a small studio space and wanted to get some comments on the general recording quality. I've renovated a walk-in closet for a recording space and added an Audio Technica AT2020 into an Alessis Multimix pre-amp. I am looking for specific feedback on how the mic sounds, the gain I am getting from the pre-amp as well as the general room sound. The mix on this is dry, no music. Thank you Donn

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107404/script-recording-86248.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    to my ears it sounded good, especially regarding interpretation and voice quality. It sounded very very slightly echo-ey but it could be ,y ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    There is a little fuzz underlying the recording - very airy. There is a little room echo as well. The room might need some further treatment. Don't neglect the floor and ceiling or any solid reflective surfaces (a desk or shelving, etc.).

    The AT2020 is a good mic. When I was looking for a good large diaphragm condenser mic, I went to B&H in NYC and sampled a lot of them. I took the AT2020 home and played with it for a couple of weeks. I took it back and spent the extra $40 or so for it's bigger brother, the AT2035. It has a little more dynamic range and picks up the bottom (bass) of my voice a bit better. It also has a couple of settings on the mic itself (a low cut filter and 10dB cut) and a shock mount is included in the package. The shock mount alone would set you back another $35 for the AT2020. I highly recommend the AT2035.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nicely read. I'm not hearing what the others are hearing on my system. There is a bit of preamp noise when I turned up the volume, but other than that no reverb or room noise. Very well done, and any problems with the preamp noise is easy to manage with a Waves NS1 plugin. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there everybody...
    Thank you for the very helpful feedback on this.

    Lack of gain with the pre-amp was something I was concerned about and I am indeed running the gain and volume a little higher than I think I should to get the output volume I wanted which is definitely adding that "fuzz" that no one wants.
    Probably going to experiment with the Steinberg UR series

    I went back and forth on the mic between the 2020 and 2035 but for my voice I think the 20 may be better as I tend to be a little bottom end heavy voice wise. I think ultimately I may continue that search in the future but I don't want to change too many things at once.
    The room does still have some spots that may need some dampening as there are some hard surfaces still exposed so I will definitely take some action on that.

    Thanks again for the kind words and excellent input.

    Donn

    Peer Feedback:

    Just FYI: I've been using the Steinberg UR-12 and think it's GREAT.

    Peer Feedback:

    I hear a slight room effect...a hard surface somewhere, but it's slight. What is quite obvious is the 'fuzz' James brought up. If you're in a closet, I'm going to have to assume you've got the gain maxed out on the channel you're using on the Alesis. I had a similar issue with a Lexicon Alpha input some time ago. I had to turn the pot all the way up and any time you have to do that, you're going to introduce noise. Made sure you don't have any attenuation anywhere in the sound chain active OR the gain knob (near the XLR input) turned up too far. There's two gains per channel essentially...the "gain" and then the "volume" at the bottom. Maxing either pot out will create some extra system noise. The AT-2020 is a good starter mic. As James pointed out, the little bit more for the 2035 is well-spent. You get the mount and you get a little more bottom end. I've got one and it's a very good mic for the money. It can be a little bit sharp at the top end, which creates sibilance in my case. But if you're not one who has a tendency to be too bright in the 's" sounds and "ch" sounds, the AT mics can be an excellent purchase.

    But I do think that fuzz we're hearing is system sound and not room.

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound quality delivered by the microphone is acceptable. Not much is perceived noise amplifier. No reverb is heard and that's very positive.
    I think that audio can be worked off very well for audio editor.
    Congratulations

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    Bar-S Invasion

    Script:

    Today we take what is ours. Today we continue our legacy which has transpired from the greatness of armies several centuries in the making.

    Today, we will be equipped with the necessary weapons that will bring us victory and make us the undisputed leaders in the Value segment. Today we stand together and start making our competitors turn their heads.

    THE BAR-S INVASION HAS BEGUN... LET THE DOMINATION BEGIN!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear otto philips's recording

    A new style of read for me, what do you think?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Just as a starter, I'm not sure what Bar-S is - an in-house corporate promotional thing or a shoot-em-up type video game? (Seems to be a little too "cut-throat" to be a broadcast corporate commercial.) But, it could be either. I'm leaning toward the latter.

    In either case, the language is very bold! The vocal timber fits, but the intensity could probably be pumped up a notch. This is a verbal battlefield. If you take that imagery and apply it to the words - spitting the consonants like the ratt-a-tatt-tatt of gunfire with a sharper edge to them. You could use a fuller voice (like, say, Patrick Stewart) or choose that intense whispered technique (like an intense "In A World") with very little voice or something in between (which this kind of is). Any which way, it could have a sharper edge to it - in musical terms, more staccato than legato.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

    Any comments welcome on quality and read. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very good read
    The pace was good and clear, except for the word consuming.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Really nice.

    Just a couple of things. If you're using a noise gate or de-breather, it's not picking up all of them and leaving some words clipped off or distorted a little. For instance, the first "tasks" was clear and the second iteration got clipped at the end, Dunno if it was you or the plugin.

    A little "click" after "automation".
    A tiny indication of a breath sound after the first "tasks" and after "For example"
    mrsolfe mentioned "time conSHuming" and there was a little "click" after that too, and an abrupt cutoff.

    Tweaks on a pretty good read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the great feedback James. It looks like my cans are not as good as I first thought and it was only after you pointed out the minor errors that I noticed them. I am always trying to improve my critical ear. Just bought a pair of Sony MDR 7506'S so hopefully that will help!

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    Business Management Software Video

    Script:

    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes. To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    This is the final dry voice mix. I didn't do a ton of post processing to it, trying to retain the natural sound. But I had to learn a new suite of tools, and I need to get some benchmarks on the sound. Please nit pick, thanks in advance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27334.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nodo! Haven't heard from you in awhile! The dry read is good, you use the right pace, pitch, and tone and ad itself held my attention. Good job. Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Phew... I had to learn a whole new editing suite AND set new levels for everything. So I have been fine tuning as best I could without killing it with overprocessing. The crash may have improved my overall sound, well, at least that's what I'm hoping for! Thanks for the comments!

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    Business Management Software Video

    Script:

    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes. To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Based on feedback I tried to better balance the music and vocal. Again, hard for me to tell if it's too low or too high.I recorded this slower more relaxed version as a take of the original. I wanted to create a jazzier feel with this one because the read was so different. It's easy to tell comparing the 2 dry voice tracks, do you think there's a difference when I mix the music bed? All comments welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27335.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Nodo. Welcome back. I'm overdue for a system crash so I won't be too far behind. I vote for this version. I prefer this music bed to the earlier one. This one is pitched lower without so much of the spikey highs. To me, it fits the read better. But I would have brought the music level down a bit; for this type of read you don't need the music to add a lot of energy, but it needs to provide a background. There seem to be subtle differences in the read itself. This one is just a bit more laid-back which I like with this music. This version has a more natural expression of the term "business processes" - much more natural than the same 2 words in the dry read. I also prefer the reduced emphasis behind "to keep growing" in this version. It all might be personal preferences but it all comes together for me more naturally in this version. - David

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for taking the time to post David. I used to use Adobe Audition and it's a rolls royce.I had all my plugins where I wanted em, All the levels were set and it was a breeze. Down goes the computer. Audition didn't sound the same somehow on the new computer, so instead of installing all the plugins and all that, I tried Nuance 4 because a friend had a copy after upgrading to protools. I had to learn almost all over again how to get the same sound I loved in Audition. Now I can record with confidence again... Thanks for the comment on the music, the more I hear it, I agree, need to touch the music down just a bit. Thanks for taking the time!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, it is hard to beat Audition. Very easy to get the music and vocal bed volumes in sync. I would try and bring down the music levels as it's swallowing up your vocals in this recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,

    Definitely better! The flow is good as well as the editing and sound, but I have to agree with bnstone, to bring the music levels down just a bit, so we can hear more of your voice. I'm not familiar with Abode Audition, however if it is similiar to Audacity try to Amplify the music track to the best level possible so it won't over shadow your audio. Looking forward in hearing more from you! Also, uploaded 3 new scripts if you want to listen. Best of luck, LCW.

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    Business Management Software Video

    Script:

    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes. To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Great to be back. Catastrophic crash of main machine, with all software. New machine records different, New Software records different, New plugins... you guessed it. I had to rebuild from scratch find the sound and relearn an entire editing suite. I Copied a wonderful rendition done by TxTom and tried to make it my own as he so effortlessly does. Comments especially on the audio levels/voice encouraged as well as overall impression. Thanks and it's good to be back here, and not pulling my hair out by the roots trying to figure out what the next step is!!! :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27333.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this one better, because the music bed makes the script more effective, but I would just decrease the music a little. However, I feel that with the bed of music added, it enhances your voice and makes the performance stand out. Well done! Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    So great to be back, I'd just spent the last few days learning a new software package and I'm just happy to be able to get the sound where I want it. Still have to figure another step in the process, but I'll wind up cutting my post processing down to nothing. I went from Audition to Nuendo 4 because after the crash, the levels on the new machine, finding all the plugins etc ect... A pal gave me his copy after he upgraded.

    Yes, I completely agree need to tone that music down a notch. I need to develop a better ear for that... or find a nice setting! :) Thanks again, can't wait to hear more of your stuff

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    Businessman Heroes

    Script:

    50 years ago, businessmen were folk heroes. You and I may think the first Henry Ford was an eccentric with a distinctly comic side -- but our grandfathers didn’t. At the turn of the century, a certain class of business figure enjoyed a degree of public admiration that Americans of that period offered to very few of their politicians. Over the years, but especially since World War II, that unqualified admiration has evaporated. The trouble has little to do with the conduct of business, and everything to do with the present stage of American technology.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Patrick Kamler's recording

    Hello! I'm working on finding scripts that work for my voice so I can better grasp what I can do. I appreciate your feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Businessmen Heroes.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very pleasant voice to listen to. I felt a bit uncomfortable in the read because of the pauses. There were many mid-sentence pauses that you might have been using to emphasize words, but in the end it just hurt the flow of the read. It jerks the listener in and out. May I recommend you do another recording without those pauses? I think you will be happier with the result.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mike is right. You are more of a phrase reader than a sentence reader. Don't treat phrases as a complete thought. They must contribute to the flow, fluid and complimentary to the whole.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback! On this read I was very intentional on my pauses because of my tendency to go too fast. I will definitely re-record without the dramatic pauses. Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Patrick
    RELAX don't rush it great voice but give meaning to the words your saying. Being able to read as fluently as you do is a good thing, but you got to find the key words and the places where you can give emotion to the copy like "over the years" sound like you were in a rush . Not bad at all overall !!
    Regards
    Balazs

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    City Harvest

    Script:

    Millions of pounds of good, edible food are thrown away each year by New York City food businesses. At the same time, an estimated 1.5 million people are hungry, one third of them children. City Harvest is the link between those who have so much and those who have too little. City Harvest is committed to feeding hungry people in New York City using a variety of innovative, practical and cost-effective methods. Our primary approach is to rescue food that otherwise would be wasted and deliver it to those who serve the hungry. City Harvest strives to be a model for others to fight hunger in their communities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gheilweil66's recording

    Tried not to be overly friendly since I tend to do that lately. Not to mention this is a corporate narration script. As a result, I wanted to bring up the issue of wasted food and hungry people in a way that was informative with a hint of compassion that doesn't hop into the camp of being expressly sad. I tried to build every time I hit City Harvest so that my delivery wasn't repetitive. Was this effectively done? Is there another way I should have delivered one (or more) of the lines? Lastly I think I paused too much after "strives" Do you hear any other delivery issues on words like that? Did I convey the right tone throughout? <br> <br> Thanks as always, Graham

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113914/script-recording-90720.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It was a decent performance. Had a monotoned sound to it. Kinda sad sound to it. The recording quality was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Echo-y, live recording space.

    There's absolutely no gravitas being given the script through this delivery. No gravity to the subject matter...no attempt to draw in the listener to the serious/sad situation of people in need of the basics like food. CHILDREN. You're just reading these lines in a disinterested way....and then...the group with at least some help for them...smile some to differentiate the sad reality of hunger from the message of hope brought by this group with food for the poor.

    It's one thing to try not to sound cheerful, but this came out like "eh...whatever...there's some people with problems." Even thought it's a PSA, it's still in need of a proper delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    It does seem to need a bit more punch -- not happy punch, but concerned punch. I"m not hearing the recording space echo on my speakers. The quality of your voice is excellent, although, from a technical perspective, I did hear several instances of mouth noise. In most cases that can be edited out, but it's easier if it is nipped in the bud by keeping the mouth moist.

    Nice voice. Keep up the good work. Get to know the copy well enough to "feel" the message and deliver accordingly.

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    City Harvest

    Script:

    Millions of pounds of good, edible food are thrown away each year by New York City food businesses. At the same time, an estimated 1.5 million people are hungry, one third of them children. City Harvest is the link between those who have so much and those who have too little. City Harvest is committed to feeding hungry people in New York City using a variety of innovative, practical and cost-effective methods. Our primary approach is to rescue food that otherwise would be wasted and deliver it to those who serve the hungry. City Harvest strives to be a model for others to fight hunger in their communities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    Hello again friends, This is a repost having taken into consideration your comments. This is with the new preamp only, no post production work other than noise reduction and normalization to -3dB. How does it sound? Is the read any better? Thanks in advance for your help. All the best, Scott

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8309/script-recording-30352.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Scott, Nice read. Did not hear the first post, and I am no sound engineer, but there is a small feel to the sound like you are speaking in a box. Just a little. I think if you were to put a musical score under your voice, I wouldn't have noticed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - a little choppy in places...too many pauses. You have a nice voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a couple suggestions on phrasing Scott. I hardly feel qualified to offer suggetions but this is what I hear and think.

    I hear this, (the ...'s is a pause)
    City Harvest is the link....... between those who have so much and those who have too little.

    Consider this.
    City Harvest is the link between those who have so much....... and those who have too little.

    I hear RESCUE emphasized.
    Our primary approach is to RESCUE food that otherwise would be wasted.

    Consider emphasis on FOOD.
    Our primary approach is to rescue FOOD that otherwise would be wasted.

    Al

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks to everyone for the observations and comments. Appreciate the feedback!

    All the best,

    Scott

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    City Harvest

    Script:

    Millions of pounds of good, edible food are thrown away each year by New York City food businesses. At the same time, an estimated 1.5 million people are hungry, one third of them children. City Harvest is the link between those who have so much and those who have too little. City Harvest is committed to feeding hungry people in New York City using a variety of innovative, practical and cost-effective methods. Our primary approach is to rescue food that otherwise would be wasted and deliver it to those who serve the hungry. City Harvest strives to be a model for others to fight hunger in their communities.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Skmigs's recording

    So have no experience with corporate, and am unhappy with the feel of it. Should one warm it up with a smile, or should it be more straightforward? It feels very sing-songy and boring to me and would love tips on making it more dynamic. I don't have a studio yet so forgive the sound quality. My mouth noises are also bugging the bejezus out of me, so feel free to give tips on that too! Thanks so much in advance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-94626/script-recording-78784.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your sound is better than mine lol I also didn't hear any mouth noises that I could decipher. A little waver in the voice but that's different.

    I'd suggest not punching the beginnings of the sentences as hard, try hitting Harvest instead of City -that may help. You come in really strong, and then dip down in energy pretty steadily and quickly. Not so much it's mundane, it's actually a very nice read. But there is certainly a rhythm to it.

    To make it more dynamic, pretend you are the founder of City Harvest and hunger is your personal cause -then find which of these phrases really matters, and focus on them.

    Peer Feedback:

    That's all very helpful and I think it's what you mentioned about the "rhythm" that was bugging me. Will try it again with your suggestion in mind, thank you!!

    Peer Feedback:

    This kind of reminds me of the UNICEF ad with Alyssa Milano.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TdqWwNhBeZM

    It's just a little "affected" (kind of actor-y) and hammers at the theme (and the words) a little too hard. The "guilt trip" angle. Sorry to say, it turns me off more to the message (or messenger), even though I know it's a very worthy cause.

    Note the contrast to this guy's delivery. Serious subject, but with a smile to warm the cockles of even the coldest heart. A more uplifting tone. Warm and fuzzy. More of a "real person" kind of delivery.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AHffiDYUMy0

    Peer Feedback:

    I would go with straightforward because of being committed to feeding hungry people. Your read is a little sing- songy, but practice will help you be a better story teller. Hitting the words City Harvest that hard sounded liked you clipped on the recording. Breath support might help evening that out. Didn't really notice mouth noises, but I always try to have water close by while recording. Sound quality was good considering you said you don't have a studio. Like your voice tone and pacing. Overall a good read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I agree breath support is definitely an issue and I'm skyping with Lara next week for some exercises. And you're right -- I hit City Harvest too hard after feeling like I didn't give it enough emphasis on an earlier recording. Have to find a better balance. Thank you for the notes, they are helpful.

    And James thanks for that link, I do like his delivery and he gave me ideas for a different take.

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    Clarin

    Script:

    Clarins "Welcome to our company" video presentation
    Welcome to the Clarins Family. It is our objective to provide you with a warm and exciting environment filled with opportunity and growth. This presentation will cover our Employee Benefit Program Highlights, Company Policies, and Personal Policies. Please follow along with the provided employee handbook. Let's get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear billmcnulty@cox.net's recording

    Newbie take 2. First take received wonderful feedback, with the added comment that there is nowhere to go but up! Lets hope that is true!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106870/script-recording-87443.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Slightly different script posted than what you read, but not a biggie.

    I played your previous post. It seems that you've improved your recording quality. No more electronic hum. There is just a little underlying fuzz to the recording, but that might be taken care of with a noise reduction plugin.

    From the top:

    Leave just an extra "breath" of space between your slate (and product/service name/title) before you dive into the copy. It gives you that "beat" to settle yourself before jumping off the diving board.

    In the first sentence, "objective" seems the more operative word than "our". Many VO coaches might tell you not to "hit" the possessive, but instead the word that it modifies.

    Analyze the copy in "thought clumps". To get your brain to force your mouth to say them, you might circle them in the script. For example: "...a warm and exciting environment..." can be treated as one thing (a thought clump). Breaking it up reminds me of that line in "Blazing Saddles" - "It is my privilege to extend to you a laurel, and hardy handshake." - where it is obvious that it's a play on words referring to the comedy team of Laurel & Hardy, which you would say as almost one word (thought clump). Same thing with "...our commitment to excellence and our commitment to people..." Since "commitment" is used twice, it's the object that is important (excellence & people) and are the more operative words to emphasize.

    Watch the long A sound. You came close to "AYE warm - and exciting" when the shorter "uh" is how most people would say it in normal conversation.

    Lists: They usually come in three's, which it does here, although there are exceptions. This list is the "topics" (another thought clump).

    Most of your breaths come in odd places, causing the delivery to sound choppy. Again, circling those thought clumps may trick your brain to complete them before the necessity of taking a breath. You might also mark your scripts for logical places to take breaths to get the copy to flow more smoothly.

    There is a bit of mouth noise. But as your editing and mic technique skills improve, you'll be able to eliminate, or at least lessen them.

    Lastly: Relax. Imagine that you're talking to a friend and not the general masses out there. That's the difference between sounding like you're just reading, to connecting with your listener.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rebeccakwoods's recording

    First time seeking feedback via this forum! Thanks for your feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17968/script-recording-39825.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The script doesn't coincide with the performance as you skipped around it a lot. I would do this one over, however be informative, yet relaxed and conversational to make the delivery work.

    All the best,
    Lenny

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    Generic corporate read that I recent recorded. The direction was something along the lines of "cinematic, inspirational, corporate presentation....", voiced under a panoramic video of some sort. All comments welcome. I haven't submitted in a long time, but I'm trying to get back into the groove.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2126/script-recording-97941.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your rich deep voice, vocal performance and the recording quality of this recording. The only thing that I could possibly comment on and it is really nit-picky is that I noticed a pattern of every dramatic pause, (I liked the pauses and realized they are for a video) you always go down in pitch on the last word of every pause - you may want to change it up a bit idk. These words I noticed pitch down - Connected, Connected, be, safer, sooner, prosper, volunteers, visionaries, doers, everyone. I do feel that this is a commercial quality.

    Peer Feedback:

    thanks ecstern.
    the script is written (I should've included it for context) as short, choppy sentences:

    "Communities are defined by the people that make them prosper.
    The volunteers.
    The visionaries.
    The doers. "

    cheers
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice! Really like the performance, production and sound quality.

    A couple of thoughts:

    - In the very first line, I'd like to have heard more of an emphasis on "being" and less on "connected" -- to make it contrast more with "...feeling connected".

    - At the very end, I think "...for everyone" could have been emphasized more, maybe a slight pause just before it, making it sound more final. As is, I think it sounds a bit like there's more to come.

    Overall, though, great job! Very pro.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great! Thought overall you nail it.

    Personally, I like backing tracks even a little bit quieter than this, but it wasn't distracting.

    Given the appropriate emphases you gave in many other places, I felt you could've colored "vast" a little bit more. The phrasing on "how to make their local place a little better each day for everyone," felt slightly run-together to me (and I do mean 'slightly') and it'd be nice to emphasize the positive word 'better' a bit.

    Nice work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds like you're still in the groove. Robust, resonating voice. I like the emotion as well. Welcome back.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow. Shut up and take my money. Seriously, I loved it. The only thing that stood out to me was the sharp "f" on 'feeling connected'. I would treat that in the editor the same way you would a sibilant 's'. otherwise it is commercial perfection.

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    Corporate Video - Digital Information

    Script:

    Currently, viewing information, requires users to sift through a hodgepodge of sources, with relevance often determined by obscure page ranking algorithms. Actually finding what you're looking for can become frustrating, as you comb through page after page of static links which often contain misleading, or conflicting information. Connecting the dots is nearly impossible.

    With digital information expected to grow by a factor of 44 annually through 2020, finding what you need will become even more difficult in the future.

    Presently, 90% of all Internet users use search engines for finding information and we spend nearly 10% of our time doing so. Time is wasted searching for information, and information is wasted when it's not specifically searched for. With the the potential for more data to be generated in the next 4 years than in the entire history of the world, how much more time can we spend searching for information - and how much more valuable information will get lost in the digital space as a result?

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear thibeaultj's recording

    This script is an excerpt from a corporate video consisting of animated caricatures acting out the text, so it is intended to have a semi-whimsical feel while making it's points. Any feedback in terms of read or quality is appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6622/script-recording-26200.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, nice recording. At times, however, it did sound a bit mechanical and it felt like you were reading to me instead of talking to me (something I'm working on as well!). There were a couple of awkward pauses, especially in the last paragraph and the sentence, "With the potential for more data..." Other than that, your voice is comfortable, trusting and easy to listen to and the quality of the recording was good. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! You had great pacing here, which is important for a read like this. Your voice also works pretty well for a recording like this; it's definitely castable.

    However, there are a few bones to pick here. As spudcln said, there were several parts of this reading that felt very emotionless and mechanical. Trying to add more inflection to your voice will help with this problem.

    Peer Feedback:

    Spudcin has it right. This felt very mechanical...choppy. Also felt read from a page. Work on inflection and smoothing out the choppiness. Practice will iron these issues out.

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    Corporate

    Script:

    Calling all visionaries across the world
    Go ahead - dream big
    A revolutionary building.
    A lightening-fast commute.
    A thriving city.
    A safe world.
    We’ll make it real.
    We’re not just engineers, designers, builders, …
    Together, we’re something greater.
    Something new:
    A company built to solve the challenges of the future
    …. And those of today
    Together, we’re thinking without limits…
    And reimagining what’s possible.
    We’re redefining infrastructure
    Creating opportunity

    Strengthening communities

    Making life better

    That’s what we deliver
    By joining forces
    We make amazing happen
    Connecting the best ideas…
    And fueling innovation.

    So go ahead, dream big

    Together, we can create an extraordinary future.
    AECOM...IMAGINE IT. DELIVERED

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear eddiethatvoguy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129052/script-recording-99000.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good voice. I think you could make this sound more exciting as if you are telling your friend or family about this new opportunity - it sounded a bit too much like you were just reading. Phrases like 'lightning fast' or 'thriving city' are opportunities to invoke energy and paint the picture for the listener. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree, you do have a good voice. There is a little swag to it if that makes sense. I would also agree and ask "who were you talking to?" Always have a picture in your mind of who you are talking to. Good pacing and flow. Keep up the hard work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is very natural and dreamlike. It would be really cool to hear you do a spa or vacation spot. Nice job!

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    Davidson Inc

    Script:

    Davidson Incorporated
    Davidson Inc. is a leading publisher and distributor of multimedia software for both the home and school markets. The company is internationally renowned for its award-winning consumer titles, such as the Blaster series, which has sold over 3 million copies. In the school market, Davidson is best known for interactive multimedia systems including Story Club, English Express, and the upcoming Vital Links. Vital Links is a multimedia U.S. history system for the middle grades being developed by Davidson, Addison-Wesley, and the Los Angeles County Office of Education via a grant from the states of California, Florida, and Texas.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    Working on narration. All feedback welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Davidson Inc.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    theheartofmel --
    really nice read. great voice, and good message delivery.
    If I were the director......I would probably change a thing or 2, but overall this is a really nice read.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read and pacing. Watch the "and" in the first sentence, it got a little sharp and harsh on the "a" sound. The word "titles" had an odd inflection to my aged ears, Maybe it just seemed that the emPHAsis was on the second sylLAble. You are correct in not saying "Vital Links" the same way, especially since it's repeated right away. But I feel that you went to too much to the extreme. Again, it's emphasis. It is possible to keep the emphasis on the same words without making the two iterations sound like two different things. BTW, if I wasn't reading along, I would have thought you said "Vita Links". It's a tricky name. It needs that glottal stop between the words, the L's. The pause between "Davidson" and "Addison-Wesley" led me to think that they were two separate sentences and broke up the complete thought. Me thinks there was an edit in there?

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job! You squashed the sing-songy thing you slip into sometimes, and I thought you were terrific!

    More as an aside: I hear some dead spots between edits and wanted to mention how to get rid of that in case you don't know. If you're using software that will let you have multiple tracks, you can add in a track of silence from your recording space. That will fill the dead spots by clipping out breaths and make them much less noticeable.

    Peer Feedback:

    ALL excellent feedback! Thanks everyone for taking the time to listen, to make suggestions and general encouragement.
    Tonia - thanks for noticing improvement! :) I'll play with the editing. I totally know that trick and didn't do it... I'll get it right.

    ~Melanie

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    Deloitte & Touche USA LLP--Getting Ready For The Aging Consumer

    Script:

    What you need to know. In 2008, the dominant customers in the U.S. and the world will be consumers age 50 and older. Regardless of your industry or sector, you could prosper by focusing on these aging consumers and understanding their evolving needs.
    New research, a podcast and articles from Deloitte & Touche USA LLP can help
    you understand these older consumers-what they want, how their needs will
    change over the years and how your business can serve them best.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kate's recording

    All feedback welcome. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7330/script-recording-30730.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Like your other piece, this still feels a tad "scripted." However, your pacing was GREAT here; I myself have a lot of trouble reading that slowly, but you've nailed it. Just try to sound less like you're "doing voice over" and more like you're having a conversation with a friend and you'll be solid!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi jmm878 thanks for the feedback on both my recordings. Yes, I totally agree so will work on having more of a conversation. Thanks again.

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    Dietary Council (Self-composed, not in library)

    Script:

    If only it were that easy. If only we could just go back to last Tuesday and start our diets then… go back a few weeks and eliminate that nightly snack… show character for a moment–back then. Hold on to any number of resolutions made over any number of past New Years.

    Well, we can’t. And it seems that immutable fact makes it so easy to continue to ignore and excuse the decisions that pile up in front of a healthier life each and every day.

    We can tell you to get some exercise and eat right. But we’re not your mother… or your wife… or your children. We’re a company. What we see are spreadsheets and studies. And they all tell us the same thing… and you know what it is…we’re getting too overweight and too complacent.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jimlight's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-86990/script-recording-78486.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jimlight,
    Your recording quality was fine- no background noise at all, and very crisp voice. Your emotion had an edge of regret/wistfulness about it, but I think that's ok given the subject. In the second graf, the sentence about the immutable fact, I felt like you were adding pauses that didn't need to be there. Maybe try doing the sentence without those beats, but at a smooth pace overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. I enjoyed everything about it. Keep that up and I'm sure you'll do well.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi! It' s Danielle from Edge. Terrific work! Thanks for submitting it. You are very present and easy to listen to...its a conversational read and you have a wonderful instrument. There are a few technical things that if I was keeping an ear on this piece for a demo record, I would fix. There is a glottal attack on the initial word IF and it makes it feel like the piece begins abruptly. Glottal attacks and glottal stops are small pauses that create a staccato feeling in a read. Try stretching the vowel sounds especially on a short word like if or easing into it using pitch lift to hit. When you link to create flow be mindful that you don't rush. I also hear some glottal fry as on the word past. glottal fry happens when we run out of air. It sounds like a creaking door. The slang for it is sitting down on your cords because it happens when we produce sound without adequate breath support. ...we speak beyond our natural breath cycle. In general, I would like to take this to the next level by creating more flow, more vocal variety and more thought discovery. It would be interesting to combine following the punctuation in this piece with playing acting actions. Many traditionally trained actors consider the ... to indicate a change of thought or action...rather than just as a pause or an interruption. So it is often a clue to use another tactic with your listener. If you have been trying to convince perhaps next you would choose to clarify. Honoring the em dash can also help us with acting choices. It's twice as long as the en dash,( sometimes confused with the hyphen) and is used most often in a sentence to set apart two independent but related ideas. For example the em dash before back then. Two independent ideas require two separate colors or acting choices. I would also take a look at the beginning middle and end of the section and lead the listener through the story thought by thought, section by section,,, as if each line is the only thing you have been hired to say. Thought discovery will happen naturally if you don't play with prior knowledge but imagine you need to speak that specific line at that specific time to convince, inform, challenge your listener. There is no other line that will serve but you only discover you need those words at that moment...instead of planning out the story or the speech. Its a subtle distinction but it will change the read. Thought discovery can be crafted technically by entering the new thought on a different pitch than the one on which you resolved the previous thought. Keep up the good work!

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach April 7, 2015 at 11:23AM
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    Disruptive Innovation

    Script:

    How does a small, young company beat an industry giant on its own turf?
    Disruptive innovation.
    It works like this: Big players focus on sustaining innovation, upgrading existing products and services to attract higher-paying customers.
    Disruptive innovation creates new markets and reshapes existing ones.
    To achieve growth in a fast-changing world, you want to be a disruptor. Don’t be disrupted

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    More practice . . .

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-56765.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there

    A nice read but it felt a bit fast to me. It was a lot to take in. Also it ended abruptly so I am not sure if you meant to end at "don't be disrupted" or was this part of a sentence that became truncated. I also think you need to make more of a distinction between a big company and a disruptor. Being a disruptor is your key message so this needs to have more emphasis. Good luck

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Kate. I would slow the pace down. Nice read overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree it was a bit too fast in spots, however, it was a good read. The phrasing and energy was good. Nice, clear pleasant voice.

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    Eastman Credit Union

    Script:

    What is branding?
    It’s the difference between soda and Coke, coffee and Starbucks, tennis shoes and Nikes, Walmart and Target.
    A brand is not the logo.
    A brand is not the product.
    A brand is an emotional connection to both.
     
    DIRECTION:  Seeking a male voice that conveys trust & respect; the sound should have a freshness like it is coming from approx a 30 - 40 year old (versus an older)

    SCRIPT:
    Eastman Credit Union has been proudly serving this region since 1934.  But many still feel that ECU is for, well…Eastman employees. 
    Others simply don’t understand that “you can join” means them!
    More than that, many people don’t realize why they need a credit union.

    64 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear chinook23's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6276/script-recording-22201.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Chinook, I think the first half of the read was way to korny. Second half, almost dead on. The direction says just trustworthy middle aged guy. I really liked the second part however. Follow those directions bud!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the two above, mostly, but I think you blast over the A brand is not list, to fast, without enough inflection.. maybe drop the corn upfront , and treat them more like question statments, Then add a little more inflection in the next part,

    Peer Feedback:

    the opening of this script was read as too condescending and almost turned it off after Waaallllmaaaart. Definitely would not use it for a demo.

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    Employee Orientation Excerpt

    Script:

    Employee Orientation Excerpt
    Let's transition away from the Design Center and make our way to the Sales Counter. While the visual aspects of the Sales Counter are not going to generate quite as many "wow's" from our customers that the Design Centers will - making sure they are kept clean and organized is very important to appealing to our customer's perception that frequent the Sales Counter - namely the Contractors. The Counter Sales staff need to be diligent about keeping the counters themselves cleared and neat. Point of Purchase displays are supplied with important information and should only be placed in appropriate locations on the counter. Making sure the floors are kept clean and free of debris - especially since the warehouse is very near the Sales Counter - also requires diligence. Stocked merchandise placed around the Sales Counter like caulk displays, Care and Maintenance products, tools and accessories as well as transition strips all need to be kept properly stocked and neatly organized. Most of the orders are placed at the Sales Counter and as a result most of the payments get processed there as well. We need to make sure those areas where that kind of money is handled are kept clean.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    Working on general pacing, clarity, etc. All feed back is welcome. Thanks for your time. ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Employee Orientation Practice.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like your voice! Easy to understand and listen to. As this is for employee orientation, you could even get away with being more assertive.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like your voice and look forward to hearing it in better more interesting scripts. Don't ask me why but I think Travelogues would sound great.

    I thought you did read this very well. It was so boring it was a little hard to listen closely too, but I blame the writer not you.

    I would have liked a little "stronger" tone as you came across a little meek and mild. This is a counter to be used by contractors buying caulk and all that good stuff not lingerie. While this script is for the staff, not the customers, I think the type store should impact the delivery some. The staff at Home Depot is very different from the staff at Victoria Secret (thank God). You sounded just too nice. Those bozo's need to keep that place clean! I am exaggerating obviously, but a just little bit more drill sergeant tone wouldn't hurt I don't think.

    Technically the biggest thing is there was a fair amount of mouth noise (like the click in the "C" in customers in the second sentence). Not more than almost all of us have I suppose, but it seemed you didn't clean the file well, or at all. Yes, it is a pain. Sometimes I chase a particular click so long I give up and just do another take of the offending word. When you are a big VO star, others will clean this stuff up, for now it is up to you I guess.

    Otherwise the recording seemed nice and clear and I heard no room effects at all.

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    Explainer Video: CenterPoint Solutions

    Script:

    Welcome to the Ultimate Outsourcing Solution for Registered Investment Advisors.

    CenterPoint Solutions is a customizable, total back office outsource solution for RIAs and independent advisors. Our flexible service offering allows you to outsource any and all of the following: reporting, trading, billing, and even your investment process and research.
    In addition, you’ll enjoy a dedicated relationship manager, cutting-edge technology, and ongoing marketing, strategic, and compliance support. Plug into a fully turnkey, established solution—or choose only the individual services you need to customize your ideal service model. We pioneered the turnkey RIA outsourcing solution, but we’re more than just a system. We’ve been supporting fee-only RIAs, hybrid advisors, and advisors seeking to transition from commissions to fees for more than 20 years. [fade out]

    98 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear M-Theory's recording

    Am interesting in working in the corporate Explainer Video genre, and this is a practice recording.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-104812/script-recording-89358.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First impressions from only a one-time listen:

    Recording quality is pretty good. The mix with the music and sound FX is a little off, but that might not be an issue if you are required to provide the VO only and post production is done by someone else.

    Some little elocution things: "Registered" had kind of an SH sound in there - like "Regishterd". Same kind of thing with "advisors" - kinda sounded like "advizersh".

    The general pace is very good. However, it seemed a little too consistent - kinda like one long run-on sentence without slight pauses or changes in tempo to set off the concepts and ideas.

    Related to that idea, is the "list" with the keyboard/waterdroplet sound effect. It covers up the word. Better if it happens a few mili-seconds after the word (or in between the words) and in the clear. An ever-so-slight change, but more effective, IMHO. same kind of thing with the ringing phone and the sound effect on "turnkey" (both times).

    Subsequent plays:

    A little bit of mouth noise here and there - not so much tongue clicks and lip smacks as mostly a wet tongue/mouth kind of gurgle (evident in the first sentence between the words "...Solutions for..." and in between the words "... to outsource any..." Also some popping plosives ("rePorting", "comPliance suPPort", "Plug in") and a windy F's ("flexible").

    The effects around "We pioneer...", and the electronic music effect on "...more than just a system..." are a little jarring and distract the listener from the narrative.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great thoughtful feedback. Thanks for the peer coaching, James. Much appreciated!

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not as eloquent or insightful as James but I know what I like and this ... I LIKE !!
    Pleasing sound and nice recording quality. Keep it up !!

    Peer Feedback:

    To Jerry: Thanks for the feedback, and for the encouragement!

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    Explaining Software Video

    Script:

    In 2012, the amount of existing digital information exceeded a staggering 2 zettabytes, and it continues to grow at an incredible speed- more than doubling every two years.
    This explosive growth in digital information has presented serious challenges for businesses and service providers.
    Traditional hardware and storage infrastructure systems can't scale to keep up with this growth. They become clumsy to operate, and do not deliver sustainable performance.
    The world needs a solution that scales well and delivers the reliability and durability that end-users demand, yet is easy to deploy with in existing infrastructure.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jennthurston's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-18530/script-recording-40455.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I would read the second line with a bit more awe. 2 zettabytes and doubling? That's a lot of info! Then I would change the tone in the next two lines. Maybe a slight grimace on "they become clumsy." Then a nodding delivery on the last sentence.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read, maybe add a little more emotion, especially on those staggering statistics..zettabytes! Great voice! Good pacing.

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    G3Box

    Script:

    There are women who currently give birth on dirt floors in unsanitary and dangerous conditions. Some of these women will die because they do not have access to the appropriate care, equipment, and space necessary to deliver their child safely. That's why three years ago, we, four engineering students from Arizona State university, teamed up to combat this problem. Together, we developed G3Box, a solution that uses the experience of partners on the ground and the generosity of inspired individuals, foundations, and corporations to create medical grade maternal health facilities within steel shipping containers. We have worked to implement our idea by building the first clinic with the support of DDR construction and SmithGroupJJR. It is bound for Kenya, and will be placed, operated, and maintained by partners of the he international medical equipment collaborative. We'e ready! We have the clinic finished, the equipment secured, and the partners in place to send it. Now we just need the final funds to ship and install.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesskaufman7's recording

    This is just for practice, NOT for quality. I recorded it on my ipad with no mic. :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83796/script-recording-72762.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds pretty good coming from an ipad w/out a mic!

    I thought your read was quite good. There was a little hiccup on the word "generosity" and I noticed that you skipped over, "with the support of DDR construction and SmithGroupJJR" as well as "we're ready!"

    You really sounded connected to this material.

    Deidre

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    Greiner

    Script:

    Greiner

    Forging our future requires the courage to explore new dimensions. And to increase our competitive advantage, Greiner’s management is focusing its energies on developing the firm’s capabilities in emerging new markets. Specifically, we have chosen three areas which we believe will have the greatest potential for financial and technological gain. These are multi-model transportation facilities, the Asian marketplace, and public/private transportation ventures. Within this anual report, you will see some of the strides we have made in developing these markets and see the magnitude of these new dimensions and the potential they represent for future growth.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Hi - doing some corporate reads. This is the type of work I am going to be pursuing to try to get my foot in the door. Any and all comments appreciated. Thanks! Marianne

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-54009.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Corporate reads are not what I'm working on right now, but I could hear this recording being placed somewhere in a training video or lecture hall. I thought it was well done :) Nice pacing, clear, and easy to hear.

    Peer Feedback:

    I completely agree you've definitely got a place in the corporate genre.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi MHeyden,

    Your voice is clear and right tone for this kind of reads, however, I'd recommend to firstly think about what you are reading, understand it so that you can then make the read engaging and thorough. This is addressed to corporates, will spot it if you lack connection with the read....that is distracting and drives away from the goal!
    The first sentence was spot on, thereafter....it sounded to me like you were not into what you were reading.
    Hope to be helpful for that is the objective.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Eva - thanks for your comments. I tempered emotion for this read because I could see the mucketymucks in the room (board members who want the facts, mam. just the facts.) Perhaps I should have kept a bit more emotion in the read?? I will work on finding the right balance. Thanks!

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    Healthcare Website

    Script:

    The foundation of any healthcare solution starts and ends with the individual – we’re the ones who are ultimately in charge of our health.

    We process, prioritize and manage health information in our own unique way based upon our knowledge, skills and confidence.

    These three things together determine our level of health activation.

    Why is this so important? Because research shows that health activation – as measured by the Patient Activation Measure®, also known as PAM® -- reflects a person’s self-management ability and motivation, which are the keys to controlling healthcare costs.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ourvoiceguy's recording

    Hello.. As a follow up to previous submission I have moved into a new studio and am looking for some feedback on my studio sound. I'm running a Re27 into a 528e processor into a Scarlett 212 interface into adobe audition. Last demo I uploaded I was told I may have a monitor problem - or hearing loss on the high end. This is 100% raw audio.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-94264/script-recording-74122.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Here's the stats of your sound clip direct to my DAW.

    Minimum sample value -1.0739
    Maximum sample value 1.0826
    Peak amplitude 0.7 dB
    DC offset -0.0000
    Minimum RMS power -82.2 dB
    Average RMS power -16.8 dB
    Maximum RMS power -11.3 dB
    Clipped samples 85

    So, firstly, your produced sound is far too hot. It's mastered or recorded almost right to 0db. It produced 85 clipped samples which are audible distortions. It can also add a harshness to the sound with too many clips.

    http://www.symetrix.co/products/legacy/

    I assume that's your processor? Are you adding effects to the audio? Compression? EQ? To MY ears (and I'm not an engineer, but have been at this for a while) it sounds too bright. I applied some EQ to the upper bands ....almost a "de-ess" setting and it sounded better through my studio headphones. (AKG-240, just for reference).

    Your SPACE sounds clean to me. I'm not hearing echo or any kind of artifact I'd attribute to your room.

    PS: watch out for the pronunciation of "important." You dropped the last "t" in this read. You have an announcer tone that SOUNDS like you've either been on the radio or have trained as such. And the RE-27? That SCREAMS radio announcer. Between that mic and the SM-7B, that's probably 90% of announcer's tools in the industry. Great mic with great side noise rejection, but does have a certain sound we all hear in the car on the way to work.

    Sounds good, but my suggestion would be to back off the upper frequencies a bit. So this advice plus a nickle....is worth about a nickle. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds pretty good to me. I would try engaging the high-frequency rolloff switch on the RE27. If you're already doing that, then try the de-esser on the 528e with a frequency of around 7KHz.

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    Home Depot

    Script:

    Customer service has always been important at The Home Depot. Without customers there wouldn’t be a Home Depot. Today when we say customers first, we mean helping customers first. Helping people as if they were friends or family. Helping people in a way that builds customer relationships and strengthens our foundation of service.

    Introducing First, a blueprint for making excellent service a reality in The Home Depot stores.

    First is a specific set of behaviors that tells us how to help customers, it will be part of every customer interaction. First stops talking about service and actually makes it happen. Service that makes customers come back to us year after year. Are you ready?

    First things first.

    The first letter of First is F and it means find the customer and help the customer find the product.

    Actively seek customers out and take charge of helping them find what they need.

    One, find the customer. If you’re not tasking don’t sit back and wait for customers to find you, actively look for and find them.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Hi - Just finished my narration demo. This Home Depot spot is the type of work that I will be initially looking for. Please let me know your thoughts on tone and delivery. Any other comments appreciated as well. There are a few clicks or other slight editing snafus, but that's not really what I'm concerned about here. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53906.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it sounds great.Nice voice and I think tone and delivery are good and could see hearing this in the real world.Good job

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi MHeyden,

    I think you have a nice voice and this type of client/read is well-suited.

    I DID feel that the tone came across as a little perky for the subject matter. I'm guessing this is an in-house thing for Home Depot employees? At times it felt to me a little too much like you were reading a prepared script as opposed to a potential supervisor just talking to her employees about "ok, folks, here's this new program we're going to be implementing here, and here's what it entails."

    Does that make sense at all?

    Lastly, in the 2nd line, "When we saying customers first, we mean helping customers first," I'd think about emphasizing HELPING a little more, because it seems to me that that's a key aspect of the program.

    Hope this is helpful in some way.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is crystal clear, and your delivery was darn near perfect. You have a future!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Thanks to all 3 of you for your feedback. Very much appreciated!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marianne! Firstly, congratulations on completing your narration demo - yay!!!

    As always your voice is very clear, you really don't need to worry about articulation at all (just be careful of those occasional glottal stops). You have a friendly and engaging voice and I think this niche suits you nicely. Initially I thought you were talking to customers, explaining how important they are to "The Home Depot" and what great customer service they can expect to receive, as opposed to instructing employees on how to treat customers. Maybe you could make it a bit more conversational (relates to the above "perky" comment) - you aren't trying to impress them, but impress upon them...?

    There are a lot of repeated words throughout this copy, just be mindful to add variety to each of them and don't feel you have to 'hit' every "first" and "find" so hard; you don't want to labour the point and irritate your listener. Remember, they have to get through "I", "R", "S" and "T" and it could get very exhausting.

    Anyway, just a couple thoughts but overall, very nice read!!! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Niki - thanks so much! So excited to have the demo done. Now I just need to find work . . . right??? We'll let's hope so! I appreciate the comments everyone made and understand that my tone may have not hit the mark. I am going to redo this read and see if I can get it right. My initial take was thinking of so many of the college kids I know who work at Homey D (as we call it) in the summer and I was trying to be friendly as opposed to "that lady talking on the video". Your point about impressing them vs. impressing upon them makes sense, as does Bquesada's point about being too perky vs. more matter of fact. I am trying to grow and love to get these great tips that help to get me closer to making these reads work! Thanks much!

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    Jack Morton

    Script:

    Now more than ever, companies need to inspire their business-critical audiences. They need to reach out to customers and give their employees a sense of purpose. And sensitive frequent and effective communication is the key. At Jack Morton Worldwide, we create experiences that inspire customers and employees. Face-to-face meetings and events. Web and satellite broadcasts. Corporate and retail environments. Experiences that increase understanding, loyalty, performance and results. Our mission is to inspire your business community. We offer our expertise, our global network and our support.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EStaton's recording

    Recording this script for the second time as I continue to work on improved pacing and puting emphasis on the right words and phrases. Also seeking to speak in a more conversational tone to one person and not as an announcer. Looking forward to your feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jack Morton 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello
    In the first sentence a couple of words are rushed " companies, critical", also your pauses are bit too long in the middle of sentences like" inspire customers and employees" " Web and satellite broadcasts'. Try to follow punctuation and also try to keep the flow where there isn't any. Micro pauses are fine and can give dramatic effect to certain words but if they are too long, it can become choppy. Hope this helps
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Las Vegas

    Script:

    Las Vegas, Nevada is unquestionably the most popular tourist destination in America. Yet with all the attention given to this desert oasis, there are still many questions we need answered. Like: When’s the best time to visit? Do casinos cheat? How does one become a showgirl? Sit back, because whether you’re a gambler, a shopper, or just a tourist, this show has the answers to Las Vegas’s most frequently asked questions.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Just put up Packing blankets on the walls of my very tiny closet... Looking for recording comments and Neutral American sound... Still working on this... Haven't posted in 2 weeks!!! Linda: Had session with Kristin. Went really well. (acting wise) But when i let loose, the New Yawk came back in!! VERY FRUSTRATING!!!! But I'm starting to detect certain sounds that are giving me the most trouble!!!! (I think that's good!?!?) I'm scheduling another session with you very soon!!!!! Kristin suggested that I come in to the studio this time to have a session... See you soon! Thanksl!!!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Las Vegas.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jeff - I think your sound quality is very good. Looks like your blankets did the trick! As far as regionalisms go, I can detect a bit of a New York accent, but it's seems very toned down. The thing that jumps out at me is that your tone seems to not match the read. I feel as if you're giving me instructions on how to assemble my new appliance, not like you're telling me what to expect on my exciting upcoming vacation. It could use a bit of lightness and humor - think about you telling a bunch of guys who are going to Las Vegas about what it would take for them to be a showgirl, or a bunch of 70 year old ladies - that would be pretty funny, no??

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jeff,

    I agree with MHeyden...good job on the neutral accent. For me, a little "New Yawk" tends to creep in on your "A's," like in the word "many" and "back." I also get it in "because."

    I'm also with MHeyden on the tone comments. Have some fun with lines like "Do casinos cheat?" and "What does it take to become a showgirl?"

    Hope this is helpful...

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, a very nice effort. I think that you could have put a little playfulness in the tone...mischievous perhaps. One thing to watch for is the over-emphasized 'q' sound in 'unquestionably' as that's kind of a sloppy diction thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jeff,

    Your blankets did the trick, you voice sounded very clear, and crisp. I am a fellow NewYawker and boy does my accent get in the way sometimes, especially with the words, water, dog, mother, etc. I grew up in Babylon, N.Y.

    Keep practicing and you will learn to control your accent! Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    Lopez Cristobal Winerys - 2014 Corporate

    Script:

    The López Cristóbal winery is in a lovely setting surrounded by vineyards. The layout of the buildings gives the place a special charm, enhancing the beauty of its surroundings.

    Located in Roa, in the heart of the Ribera del Duero, the winery owns its vineyards and has its own state of the art technology, there by guaranteeing that the wines are produced to perfection and treated with the utmost care.
    Santiago López had long dreamt of setting up his own winery and it was in 1994 that his dream came true. After spending several years selecting the best plots of land and the best Tinta del País clones, that longed for moment finally arrived and he began to make own wine by setting up: Bodegas López Cristóbal.
    Santiago was then joined by his son Galo, who made a huge contribution to ensuring the long term future of the winery and who gave the wines their very personal character. This family enterprise, which has been in contact with the vine for several generations, understands the world of wine as a way of life.
    The real treasure of the López Cristóbal family is their 60 hectares of vineyards in which they comply with the requirements that apply to “vinos de pago”. This means that each wine is produced using grapes from vineyards of specific characteristics to ensure that the wines produced are unique.

    The philosophy of the winery is to create quality wines through the careful selection of its own grapes and with a constant focus on elegance and balance. Ultimately, wines for your enjoyment.

    LÓPEZ CRISTÓBAL ROBLE: “tasty and fruity”.
    LOPEZ CRISTOBAL CRIANZA: “complex and remarkable”.
    LÓPEZ CRISTÓBAL RESERVA: a “gentleman” in which “elegance” is the dominant feature.
    BAGÚS: made using grapes from old vines, this wine brings together “intensity” and “elegance”. This is a wine which has character and which has become one of the most prestigious in our entire country.
    LOPEZ CRISTOBAL SELECCIÓN: this is made with the most concentrated, potent grapes of each harvest. It is a wine which is “explosive and has the distinctiveness of the terroir”.

    Evidence of work well done is provided by the large number of prizes and awards won by the López Cristóbal wines in various national and international competitions.

    The López Cristóbal Winery
    The essence of our land
    The essence of our family

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Hello Everyone. Some of you may know me, others may not. I put my first recorded bit ever right here on the feedback forum, getting my start here. I recorded 60 bits over the course of a year before ever recording professionally. That was 2012. I found this place to be an incredible resource. In the spirit of everyone takes a little and everyone gives a little. I issued a challenge to some of my friends to come on over, take a look, make some comments, post something and critique a few of you guys. I mentioned it on Facebook and also to Emily Battles the PR wing of Edge. So, beware... take extra care with your clips. Sharks about...:)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-71596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You can find the video here. They stepped on the compressor too much for my taste in the video, but I didn't do the post production. https://vimeo.com/96403191 and some of the videos I've voiced are here. https://vimeo.com/tedvoinspain
    Additionally this video and script is copyrighted by Bodegas Lopez Cristobal used with permission.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent work Ted,
    There is a natural whisper in your voice that works very well in this read and that blends perfectly with the tone and texture wanting in this subject matter.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Richurd, appreciate that. I recorded this with the CAD E100S. You know txtom and I been messing with the AT 875r, I thought the CAD would give this a little fuller sound. Appreciate it man! Thanks for taking a listen and some time to comment! Ted
    PS and since the clip was sitting here like a dead fish, I thought maybe I uploaded the wrong one!

    Peer Feedback:

    Keeping in mind I've seen (and have) the video, we've talked about this. Your technique has gotten better and better and I was waiting for others to chime in. Great corporate tone without sounding formal.

    Peer Feedback:

    Congrats! And very well read :)

    I also have a E100S, but mine seems to sound a bit different. I would have never guessed they were the same mic when hearing this.

    Peer Feedback:

    Get in touch via Skype...happy to listen and help if I can Scott. I learned early on that the mic is only 50% of the equation. The preamp is also a huge consideration. In my case, I'm blessed to have a Warm Audio WA12. It is a rock star and makes every mic if ever hooked up to it sound good.
    A little aside to Everyone...Learn to use what you have. A less quality mic has more noise, but you have to learn to reduce that. It may be more sibilant, again, technique will help you.buying new equipment will not solve all your problems. I started with a behringer T-47. Noisy, not particularly easy to tame...I had to fashion a very quiet space, learn where its sweet spot was. It took months and trying a lot of different combinations and tearing the space apart again and again. Do all that now, here. And remember this addage, if it isn't the mic, or preamp, it might be you. An easy fix with the coaches here at Edge... No amount of gear will ever overcome lack of training/coaching. But quality gear always enhances your sound. Or emphasize the lack of A. Tedvoinspain on Skype scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Ted: Your voice performance was mesmerizing--deep, rich tones that reminded me of a full bodied Shiraz! I am new at feedback so let me stick to what I know...that is my own issues. I found your long pauses between paragraphs distracting. I'd just shorten them up a bit. Also, I noticed several shorter pauses in between some words like "...perfection and..." in the second paragraph, first sentence. These pauses shift my listening into neutral, and my mind begins to wander. What I try to do is pay attention to my timing and make sure my words/thought groups flow one to the other without interruption. I have found the process of correcting life long speech patterns hard work! Good Luck to you. David

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for that David. What happens a lot of time is I will get a video and have some timing marks to hit. I usually record the entire bit, then do the fine editing so that when the (proposed) music change or scene change (on screen) matches what is happening. A lot of this takes place in post production - but, and here's a trade secret, if I get a video, I rip the track and put it into my DAW. I can check the timing of the parts and ensure that it fits just where they want it. but also being able to hear the M&E track (music and effects) I can adjust my tone to that of the music, my pace is better/more to what they will eventually require, and most of all, the engineer at the final mix doesn't have to edit my clips for time. Local engineers I work with recommend me because what I do as a matter of course, my work flow process, cuts their time in half and saves them the headaches of tone matching and having to move everything around- for example here https://vimeo.com/88789496 The character is moving around on the screen, touching buttons and everything has to still flow and sound natural.
    I've done others without the video, there, just like you said "Timing and flow is everything" Good luck to you

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Buddy! Great job!! Spot on.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is clearly a perfect fit for you! I think the first two sentences feel a little distant to me--you have the right action and inflection, but you're working too hard. You end up repeating the same inflections, and it feels a little ingenuine. But then you get to "state of the art" and it's money. I could listen to you talk about wine for days! Well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thank you for listening and taking time to comment, it's easy to think that "my take" is the best but to hear other perspectives is the only way to grow professionally. That slight bit of ingenuousness that you heard might be the one key factor in getting the job or not. I have to admit, that sometimes I've submitted something under a time crunch that was not exactly like I wanted it. That's where judgement and better a really good ear can pick those parts out and seal the deal or worse, not get the job and not know why. I honestly think that I got my standards or at least set my bar by what I would post here. Based on comments like yours. Thanks for being a part of the community!

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    Marist College Website Narration

    Script:

    Welcome to the Marist Community! The Office of First Year Programs and Leadership Development provides traditional first-year students with a comprehensive orientation experience that begins with our one-day New Student Orientation and continues with Welcome Week and a unique, on-going Mentoring Program.
    There is much to be excited about as well as a few things to be done prior to your arrival on campus. For your convenience, we have assembled many of the required tasks that all new students must complete into a “clickable” checklist that will bring you directly to each area. The list is in date order, so please pay careful attention to the various deadlines and plan accordingly. We have also included an extensive Frequently Asked Question section to help you become more familiar with what is expected the summer before your arrival.
    Please check back frequently for updates designed to make your transition to Marist College easier.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear traciadair's recording

    Please ignore the poor quality of the sound. I am using a very simple USB mic. Also ignore the pops. I have always needed a pop filter when using any mic, and do not have one for this mic. This is a raw, un-edited version of my audio. I am working on "conversational" and would love constructive feedback. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2755/script-recording-60563.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a much harder script than it first appears. The second sentence goes on for about a week it seems and gives you the minor problem of figuring out where to breath among other things. Maybe a bigger stop and larger breath after "Development" would have allowed you to go on with fewer small stops later. Just an opinion.

    Anyhow, the good, and I mean really good, was you actually sounded enthusiastic about all this stuff. Your credibility was great. Beats me why you cared, but it was obvious you did, and were contagiously excited about it.

    That emotion sounding genuine is the hardest part of this read I think and you did that really well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi traciadair!

    Overall, nice read! Your voice is really friendly and I think it fits nicely with this narration. To help make it more conversational, my suggestion would be to pick up the tempo a bit - especially in the very first sentence, "Welcome to the Marist Community." I definitely hear the enthusiasm and smile behind your voice in that first sentence, but I think picking up the tempo will tighten it up.

    Also, there's an awkward pause after "students" and between the word "with" and after the word "experience." I agree with Tom that the 2nd sentence is long, however, with proper breath control and finding the right cadence, you'll be able to deliver it like you would in a conversation.

    My suggestion for your 2nd read would be to focus on talking to ONE person. Get one person in mind and deliver this read as if you were talking to that one person, as opposed to trying to speak to a large group of new students. This is what will help you speak conversationally as opposed to sounding like you are reading.

    Hope this helps! :)

    Lenox

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    Microsoft Global Sales Conference

    Script:

    There's a new world out there.
    ...but how do you get there?

    You don't just walk alone into the wilderness.

    It takes work.
    It takes passion and purpose.

    It means gearing up,
    And charting a new course.

    It means gathering a crew.
    Empowering them to think big,
    and work as a team.

    That's how the future is built
    and we all have a part to play.
    —using the power of technology
    to turn every little step
    into one giant leap.

    This is our moment
    to embrace a new culture of work.

    and this is our mission:
    to empower everyone on the planet
    to achieve more.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear akerkar's recording

    I am most interested as to whether I have good sound quality - professional enough for submitting auditions and what new equipment I might need to submit for paid jobs. My current equipment is as follows: audio interface - Steinberg UR 22 (2x2 USB 2.0 with 2 x D-PRE and 192 kHz support; microphone - Chameleon Labs TS-1 (MKII).

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-89204/script-recording-97429.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your acoustic treatment sounds like it's in good shape, but there is a prominent low hum in your recording that you will need to eliminate.

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    Mini Cooper website

    Script:

    Hi there. To have the best possible experience with MiniUSA.com, we strongly recommend visiting the Flash version of our site. But to do this you'll need to have Flash 6 installed on your machine. If you're not familiar with Flash, fear not. It's a very-easy-to-install and cool internet plug-in that's helping bridge the gap between art and technology. Kind of like Mini.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear katydid7's recording

    My studio is under construction, so this is using makeshift equipment. Thanks for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123594/script-recording-97076.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there, that was a very good read...very friendly and engaging (In my humble opinion)

    I am listening using some Audiotechnica Studio Monitor Headphones (CANS) on a Mac, and the only thing in your recording that was very noticeable was a constant 'Hiss' throughout your recording. I'm not an engineer, so I cannot provide advice on how to resolve it, but once you do resolve the audio hiss, you'll be well on your way.

    Good Job and good luck on your home studio

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear roneknight's recording

    Zero VO Training Zero Direction

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-85435/script-recording-71457.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ron K.
    What ever your set up is the sound is pretty good. Your delivery for someone new to VO sounds like you have more training or a complimentary back ground that you are not letting on. Yeah I would say give it a go.
    c.moore

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, my little instructional script:

    You will want to put the the title of your script in the "Script Title" field (which you did), insert your script in the "Script" field (which is where you wrote your first message) and your message in the " Optional: List any comments or concerns." field. - For future reference, If you choose a script from the Script Library, all you need to do is pick the script and click on the "click here" text in blue depending whether you want peer or professional feedback, and the script will automatically be included with your post - just upload your MP3 file, make comment in the "Optional..." field and submit.

    The reason for posting the script is for us to see if and how well you followed it. Sometimes we get tripped up on words or interpolate them or use alternatives. It's a way to keep you honest.

    It appears to me that you are relatively familiar with the equipment (mic, interface, computer, recording environment) and some basics of your editing software. That's a good start, although some of the edits are abrupt (or you're using a noise gate), because there are either removed breaths (with open gaps) or pauses (with open gaps) that are completely silent (zero sound). Splicing some room tone into those gaps would (even though the recording is generally a little noisy and echo-y due to your recording environment) make the recording appear a little more seamless. Sometimes, a little noise is a good thing - complete silence is not.

    There's a nice, warm, friendly, (mostly) articulate tone to the voice and it also seems (to me) that you have some skill in interpreting a script - you get the points of emphasis and the "beats". And if you did this all in one take, you're a braver man than I.

    Some specifics:

    "First we'll open..." was a little rushed and sounded more like, "First will open..." We need the long E sound for the differentiation. (Also try to avoid "First well open..." - that's a different regionalism.) A trick you might use (to fool your brain to make your mouth say it correctly) is to write it out as "wheel" - same kind of thing with "to" (2) and "for" (4) to avoid "ta" and "fer".

    There is a little mouth noise here and there (mostly internal cheek and tongue clicks). There's information on the Edge site on how to minimize that. Most of what I heard is in the clear (not in the middle of a word) so some surgical editing might take care of it.

    For zero training (although me thinks you have some public speaking, communications or possibly some acting training), it's a really good start. You seem fairly comfortable behind the mic. And you seem to have the ability to effectively relate a story.

    So the next questions are: Is instructional or e-learning the genre(s) that you intend to concentrate on? What other genre(s) are you interested in pursuing?

    Keep practicing and keep posting and hook up of a good VO coach to help you hone the skill.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi C.Moore!!

    Thank you for listening to my recording and your review. This particular recording was done in a studio in Oceanside, CA and honestly, I have NEVER done VO in a professional capacity. I did do the same company's telephony stuff, but, that was through the phone speaker. I did these flash demo's from a script, in one or two takes, and had no director with me or on the phone.

    I've never had a problem speaking in front of people and actually talk to people on the phone every day, so maybe that is what makes me feel and seem more comfortable behind the mic.

    Again, thank you so much for your response.

    Ron K

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jamesromick,

    First, thank you for listening to my recording and giving me incredible feedback. I appreciate the "instructional script" and will make sure I follow that with the next post.

    The recording equipment was through a studio in Oceanside. Ca and it was a small studio with a single dude who also lived there. So, he might not have been the best engineer, but, the company I worked for (same company as the demo, Calyx Software) was cheap.

    The scripts were written and I was able to review them and put my own little friendly spin on them as they were VERY BORING when first read. Each section took 2 or 3 takes, never more more than 3, and some took only 1.

    I agree with you on the mouth clicks, I don't think I had any water with me in the booth, which is something that will never happen again. The rushing portion of the beginning of the recording was rushed, I was totally nervous, but, once I got rolling, the nerves went away.

    This recording was done about 4 to 5 years ago and I had never had anything other than 1 speech class before that, however, my previous and current job both have me talking to people every day.

    And to answer the question, yes, Instructional, E-learning, Narration, and Commercial are all interests of mine in the VO world. I've taken the Technique 101 class with Edge and have scheduled a lot more.

    I'll be posting new recordings once I've setup my equipment properly.

    Thanks again!!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Overall help please... Working on talking to one person and neutral American, and pitch! A lot of noise but not sound proofed yet! Thanks Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17894/script-recording-50543.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the energy you bring to this script. You're enthusiasm and warmth sound authentic to me. The pitch range would be appropriate for a younger audience but perhaps too much for adults. Sounds like you're running out of breath at the ends of some sentences too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bill!
    I feel as though I am running out of air.... Partially because I'm trying not to breathe too loudly and I don't think I'm getting enough air. Thanks for your feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Bill! Nice to see ya out and about!

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    Napcor

    Script:

    One plastic bottle can now become part of all your holiday celebrations. That’s because processes have been developed that make plastic beverage bottles and food containers recyclable into new ones. Until recently, plastic containers have only been recycled into such things as carpet and fiberfill for pillows and ski jackets. But now, a bottle can come back as a bottle, over and over again. And that’s great news for the environment. In 1990, 225 million pounds of plastic were recycled. But much more needs to be done. And more people need to know that...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sherrill S's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12306/script-recording-53493.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sherrill!

    Your read managed to get me interested in what you were saying and wanted to know more....! One little think I can certainly point out is the way you ended that last "that", which sounded as a full stop, whereas it is intended to "say there is actually more about this subject to be said...." get me?

    Listen to it with eyes closed...what do you hear? who is this addressed to? what is the intention behind the read? did you succeed in portraying your message? what was the reaction?

    Answers to these questions will be helpful in improving your read!
    All the best!
    Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Sherri,

    I think this was a solid recording. It was very clean, but I think a tad cold. I agree with Eva about the technique and think you can certainly nail this one.

    Best of luck,
    Brian

    Peer Feedback:

    Good sound, pronunciation and clarity. I do think the end was a bit sharp, reminded me of a teacher talking to me. Letting the "that" sound like there was more information coming would have made the piece almost perfect.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for your comments. I intentionally ignored the ellipses at the end because I thought it would have sounded strange to just end it so I thank you for pointing out another way to think about it. It's another "arrow in my quiver" to use in approaching copy. I have to laugh about the teacher comment. It took me seven years to perfect my mean-teacher voice. It must still be with me.

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    Pfizer Corporate Orientation

    Script:

    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dmangini's recording

    Some excellent reads of this script were posted here a few days ago. I liked the script and wanted to try it out. I have not done a lot of corporate reads before so this is somewhat of a new area for me. I welcome all comments on the performance and anything you notice about the recording quality as well. As always, thank you for taking a moment to listen. David

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3498/script-recording-27661.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh Ya... Nicely done. The first para was a little shaky. Sounded a little like you were reading it. But the inflection and tone and pacing of the rest of it was marvelous. I sometimes get too emotional in my reads,(because I'm a ham) but this displayed a really nice level feel to it. Very corporate. Good Work David, Can't wait to hear more

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,
    I share with you the same comments that I gave to Nodo on his recording of this script; Copy interpretation, Vocal performance, and recording quality VERY WELL DONE! Both of you guys have excellent voices took full control of the script and you made it your own. GREAT JOB! Look forward to your next recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice David. These types of reads can be monotonous...but you maintained a good energy level with a very pleasing quality. Great job...thanks for posting!

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    Pfizer Corporate Orientation

    Script:

    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Elton E. Jones's recording

    This is take 2 of this corporate script. Based on Larry's comments, I tried to give it more of an edgy, "corporate" feel. What do you think?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3505/script-recording-34466.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your tone Is nice.

    I would say that I prefer the prior version, it it 'welcomes' more. I think that's apropo for the theme of the copy altho its a corporate piece.. this version while sonically (sp?) good, sounds distant.. Reminds me of Rod Serling.

    *Nitpick*
    your 'inspiring' sounds like 'inSPAHring". I imagine its a regionalism.

    Keep pushing ever onward!

    Wolf

    Peer Feedback:

    Curse you Red Baron!!! In deference to the woldfman and having sat through many corporate orientations, I would say this if far and away much closer to the corporate slant you want to pitch if you are trying to expand your marketing efforts to include corporate reads. It has the warmth, which says we are still "human beings" within the organization and want to feel we are individuals, but we lose our identity en mass as we pull together to accomplish the mission statement of the corporation, which as this said here was "contributing more to human health than any other company in history". I would suggest taking it a step further to sound more aloof, more distant. Almost like a voice from on high, or a preacher giving instruction to his flock. I know you've wavered. It's not your fault. But this is how we are going to do it from now on. Your voice commands trust and compassion, which I think is still over the edge for corporate. That's just my take. Good effort. Glad you tried it my way. I don't want to bend your arm too much. You should do what you feel comfortable with. Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    Cool voice, i like the tone and the way you changed it up.
    Good recording overall

    Peer Feedback:

    Larry, Wolfman, it is fascinating to get your takes on this read. Chances are, the client would give an indication of voice direction for this script based on their audience and the tone they'd like to set. It's fun to experiment with the different approaches - soft sell vs. hard sell if you will, and get feedback from you guys. Thanks.

    Vader, thanks for the kind words.

    E

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    Pfizer Corporate Orientation

    Script:

    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear scmacgregor's recording

    New mic, natural voice, no filter.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-98108/script-recording-77101.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read. It might be good to slow down just a little and maybe put a little more gap between sentences.

    The main thing that bothered me though was that it sounded somewhat "echo-y".

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there,

    I think the sound is pretty good. I didn't find it echoey. There is some mouth noise and some of the edits were tight (:19 secs got cut off).

    Your voice is nice and clean in tone, which brings up the next point on performance. I think you are sitting too low in your register, bring the pitch up to a more natural sound. It will help the flow of the script and also sound more engaging to the listener. I don't think I could hold my attention to this type of read for an extended period of time. In certain areas I would recommend picking up the pace. Some parts are more important than others, and the least important stuff (buzz words and fluff) can be glossed over a bit.

    Overall good job

    Daniel

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Daniel Krempa on sitting too low in your register.

    I just wanted to add that when you say the word "Pfizer," it sounds like you've had to say the word 800 times in the past 30 minutes, and you're completely exhausted and over it. I think that if you just focused a little more excitement & energy on the brand name, it could help color the entire read.

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    Pfizer NEW RECORDING

    Script:

    Pfizer
    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    Hello once again. I want to thank everyone for their previous comments. This is a NEW rendering of the same text. I hope there is more energy! Thanks in advance for any feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8309/script-recording-28001.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    first off , I'd say this is an improvement. Its hard to say because it seems your removed the older versions. So were left to go off our memory. But from what I remeber this is an improvement. So please understand,, I am a painter, sculptor, furniture maker, and work for an Eng. firm,, so , even when something is done perfectly. I still like to tinker with it. So the following are not criticisms,, just thoughts. I'm wondering if you might take the words like “our”, and “we” and make them more possessive sounding,, more ownership as if you are talking about your family.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent Scott!

    This one had more energy, you sound professional in the read and the pitch and the pace were perfect. Well done!

    You have a good voice for professional/corporate reads and I look forward in hearing more scripts from you.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    The smile in your voice was right up front. Your delivery was quite believable. Nice work.

    Peer Feedback:

    performance: I like your voice, and liked this read. You have a confident sound, and I like the inflections at the end of sentences. Maybe throw in occassional "up beat" at the ends, instead of mostly "down beat".

    Technical: It was really clear where your edits were in the piece. I think it' because there's noticeable room noise when your record. Pretty simple to suppress. I thought your voice track sounded good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks to everyone for the comments and feedback!

    Regarding the "our" and "we" being not particularly stressed; it is because of some training I received from Steve Hudson. He is an international voice over talent and coach in the UK. At least in his opinion, those words should not be overly stressed in a voice over. However, in this particular script, since it appears that the speaker could be the big boss, or owner, they could have been more personalized. Good point!

    How do I suppress the room noise more? Is there a way using a gate or limiter to suppress it, or do I need more protection for the microphone? I may have recorded with my computer speakers open giving some additional background noise.

    Thanks again for your help!

    Peer Feedback:

    Learning an amazing amount from the read. Thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lenmac's recording

    Recorded in my home studio with Rode NT1. How is the quality of the recording? How is my voice? Do you think my voice fits this genre (narration>corporate)? Thanks from a newbie still finding his way....

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-89312/script-recording-77468.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Lenmac.

    I think your voice has a good timbre for this genre.

    OK, technical first.
    1. You need to trim out your mouse clicks at the beginning and end of the recording. No biggie.
    2. I sometimes hear a little slapback. It's very slight; but it's there. For example, "Each of us must...".
    3. The level seems just a little low. Ensure that your raw recording peaks between -6 and -3dB.

    Performance:
    1. Some of your "lead in's" are great: "At Pfizer...," "As we continue through this organization..."
    2. I can hear the "real you." You're not trying to be anyone else: again, great job!
    3. You have a pretty apparent accent. For example, "guide us" really showcased it. I might recommend one of the coaches at Edge for this. Certainly, Linda Jones helped this south Louisiana boy.

    4. There are many times when I hear you lose your connection with the script and your delivery becomes "readie." Some of the delivery sounded downright stiff at times.

    It's an orientation video, yes; but think about what is in a _contemporary_ orientation video: panoramic views of the campus, music which is meant to inspire, people who look like they love their job. Your voice should mirror those things.

    Imagine you're a director who's worked up through the ranks and are speaking one-on-one with only one new hire, not an entire group of new hires. Be a confident guide, not a teacher or supervisor. There's a certain amount of "you're fortunate to be hired just now 'cause look where the company is headed!" to the script. The delivery should reflect that also.

    5. Related to #4. You may need to rethink some of the pitch inflections in certain phrases. For example, "mandate as an organization:" most would inflect "zation" downward slightly rather than upward.

    6. "before us" came out "be force". No biggie :-)

    7. Watch how you emphasize "and." In almost every occurrence, both volume and pitch went higher and there was a pause afterward. Only emphasize if there is a contrast between the two things being connected. If they're related, I would almost de-emphasize "and"... and directly connect it to the next word.

    Hope it all helps!

    All the best!
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    A very distinct regionalism throughout.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lenmac --
    I felt like you were reading to me, instead of explaining to or informing me. By that I mean the cadence was really linear - when you really explain something, there's a lot more phrasing, and crafting the flow.
    As mentioned, you have a prevalent east coast accent (NY/NJ?) which can detract from a corporate read, especially an international corporation such as Pfizer.
    I know guys that have a NY accent in "real life" but can switch it off in the booth. that's a helpful skill to have.

    Having said all that, I liked the read. keep submitting to the forum.

    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    @stevengonzalesvo - Thanks for your detailed appraisal. It really helps me improve.

    Peer Feedback:

    @TxTom - Thanks for your comment. This has been one of my biggest challenges. I guess you can take the boy out of NY....

    Peer Feedback:

    @Dave Saunders - Thanks for taking time to give your opinion. Its helpful and encouraging.

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    Pfizer

    Script:

    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    This was kind of a challenging script for me, I wanted it to be friendly welcome to the team for the first bit, Then, a more authoritative tone for the part about clarity of vision, The part about words being a guide, a call to be energized and behave like a leader sets up the next part to stir pride, the formal language, the call to "find a way to lead" Then the last bit, the hook, This is only the beginning. Whether it came out like that or it shouldn't really be like that (in a corporate narritive like this) But the thought behind this was that this would be the first thing the employees see, and there are parts that are clearly meant to get the attention of the employee. I would hope this would set them up for the rest of the program. Or not! :) Thanks for all your feedback, I'd appreciate any feedback on my use of post production tools, as a finished product. Too much? Does it sound like you think it should sound? Thanks again!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-27556.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Nodo,

    Excellent! You were relaxed, informative, and used authority to interest the audience, as well as to promote the company. Whereas someone wanting to join Pfizer or starting with the company would be motivated in hearing this. Well done!

    Also, received your information in which I e-mailed you back. The problem is with the microphone in general as I received the new one yesterday and it still gives off a little static as it is not a high quality microphone, so I'll continue to record the way I have been until I buy a professional one.

    Touch base with me soon. Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nodo, After reading your note to Tom, I wanted to listen to this one to try to spot the words where you spliced syllables. I've tried it myself and have not gotten anything clean enough to use. Yours are not too bad. I heard it on "orientation" and "performance" but can't pick up the third one.
    I like this script. I think I will give it a try and post it back here to the Forum. I'll try to do it later Sat or Sunday. David

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks David, I appreciate the listen, I really got lucky on the edit I think. Were it a real deal situation I'd have just recorded the phrase again. But what if it were something critical and I couldn't re-record? That's the scenario I was thinking about when I tried it. I can't wait to hear your take on it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nodo,
    Great Job! As Lcw commented, you were relaxed, informative and used authority; you accomplished exactly what you set out to. Thumbs up to copy interpretation, vocal performance, and recording quality. Well Done!

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    Podcast

    Script:

    Widespread research on recalling from the past actual sounds, voices, music, etc., adventitiously recorded by ancient peoples (or events) upon the "surface" or within the substance of a wide variety of objects and artifacts crafted (or evolved) from "plastic" media warrants intensified efforts at the present time, because of recent developments in electronic signal analysis which can ferret out "signals" buried in "noise".

    This letter is primarily intended to call attention to the potentials of Acoustic Archaeology and to record the early experiments which established the principle.

    This is of particular interest as it introduces the possibility of actually recalling and hearing the voices and words of eminent personages as recorded in the paint of their portraits or of famous artists in their pictures.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear JWVO's recording

    This is primarily for recording quality. I use Audacity. After recording I do the noise reduction on the entire read. (Noise reduction of 5 db, Sensitivity of 6, Freq smoothing 0). I then run the "Chain" which consists of 1) De-clicker, 2) De-esser, 3) Compressor (standard settings), 4) Equalization (to roll off 80 Hz), 5) Normalize.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-102951/script-recording-80755.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good tonal quality

    Peer Feedback:

    There is just a touch of echo to the recording. Probably a case of further deadening your recording environment.

    Not sure if it is something in your speech pattern or the de-esser. The S's are somewhat muted - the opposite of sibilant - and also somewhat "whistle-y" (which could be an artifact of the EQ)

    Watch the pronunciation of "ETC". It's "ET Cetera" (like Yul Brynner in "The King and I") or "Et Cetra". But definitely not "EX Cetera" or "EKS Cetera". My senior high school English teacher embarrassingly corrected me on that in front of a class of 30 and I never forgot it. And thus I have not unintentionally mispronounced it for over 40 years. Some things make an indelible impression.

    That first sentence is a killer! Not only is it loaded with archaic jargon, but it is "dry" as heck. Easy to loose the listener - I must confess, I tuned out less then midway through. But I don't fault the delivery so much as that that sentence didn't really seem written to be spoken so much as read. Kind of textbook language. Tough stuff for VO.

    Peer Feedback:

    For me, this track had a very natural sound to it... I liked that the noise reduction specs didn't seem overly aggressive.

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    Putting

    Script:

    Putting. It’s a game within a game. One with many challenges, but few masters. It’s where three feet can feel like three miles. And where good days are separated from bad days by mere inches. It’s where muscle strength doesn’t matter, but mental strength does. And if you lose control of this game, this game controls you. Welcome to Odyssey. It’s time to even the score

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear pwittenb's recording

    Still working on my skills

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6098/script-recording-92548.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Disclaimer: I'm a beginner and I have to give feedback in order to give it. You sound great to me!

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't tell if you have a lot of fry in your voice or if there is some kind of modulation going on in your audio processing. At the words "three feet" the fry/gravelly becomes very pronounced. I hear it prominently also in "where", "muscle strength", "strength" and "lose".

    I would emphasize the word "inches" differently. It's an opportunity to break up the cadence.

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    Science: It's Just Not Fair

    Script:

    So your school is having a science fair! Great! The science fair has long been a favorite educational tool in the American school system, and for a good reason: Your teachers hate you. Ha ha! No, seriously, although a science fair can seem like a big “pain,” it can help you understand important scientific principles, such as Newton’s First Law of Inertia, which states: “A body at rest will remain at rest until 8:45 p.m. The night before the science-fair project is due, at which point the body will come rushing to the body’s parents, who are already in their pajamas, and shout, “I just remembered the science fair is tomorrow and we gotta go to the store right now!”

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Patrick Kamler's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Science Fair.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I went back and listened to some of your earlier recordings and read some of the comments. Some of the same things still apply. Chiefly, the pace. It's a little manic and rushed, even for a comic piece, right from the start.

    "Great!" - I guess there are a couple of ways go. What you did was fine, but the downward inflection gave it a certain finality for me, whereas if you kept the enthusiasm high with an upward inflection (not as over the top as Tony the Tiger), the comedy shift (the procrastination aspect) may have more of a set-up. But, I dunno, it's a judgement call. I can hear you doing it the other way in my head.

    Watch the long A's - "A favorite" and "A body at rest..." People in normal conversation don't talk that way - and you didn't do it elsewhere - "uh science fair" and "and for uh good reason."

    The "Ha ha!". These interjections are always tricky. Do you actually say, "ha ha"? Or is it something else like an indicated chuckle? The only other way a copywriter, playwright or screen writer could indicate something like this is this way: (he laughs) or (he chuckles). Unless it's something like a sarcastic remark like, "Oh, yeah, right! Ha ha! Very funny!", it's an indicated laugh or chuckle. Saying the words or approximating the words just sounds odd in this context. Think of how David Letterman chuckles with that big grin and then turns on a dime and his face breaks into the "No, seriously" expression and he continues on with his story.

    You set off "pain" by observing the quotation marks, but with the downward inflection, it sounded like the end of the sentence or thought, with a period instead of a comma to continue on. That's also a very long, run-on sentence with a quote within a quote (which is punctuationally incorrect, by the way), so the challenge is to figure where the complete thought fragments can be separated out - and where to breathe.

    The final quote was rushed to the point that some of the words got slurred and rammed into one another. If anything, if you're going to go that fast, it needs to be over-articulated so there's no mistaking what the words are.

    It's a nice piece of copy (even if the punctuation isn't quite correct). Take your time with it. Set up the funny and deliver the punch with articulation.

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    Script submitted by vocal_adrenaline

    Script:

    The student's script would go here

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vocal_adrenaline's recording

    Hey Rosi, This is where a student would pose specific questions or give you a little bit of background information. You should see a yellow box below where you fill in your feedback. Thanks, Joey

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-257/script-recording-31809.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice work. Good tone and delievery. Your voice sounds good in this type of woek.
    G

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    Silicon Valley Group

    Script:

    Silicon Valley Group designs, manufacturs, and markets technically sophisticated equipment used in the primary stages of semiconductor manufacturing. SVG’s product offerings include photoresist processing equipment; oxidation, diffusion, and low-pressure chemical vapor processing systems; and photolithography exposure tools that utilize step-and-scan technology.

    40 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear John Gass's recording

    Hi folks, Great feedback, all. Thanks! I can see what I need to work on - my challenge (one of many) is to sound interested without rushing. Hard for me, because when I am interested in something I talkreallyfast. So, here's "take 2". I'm interested in the pace and "feel" of it - have concerns about being "announcery" and forced. I'm also aware of some clickiness, which I'm working on (gotta lay off the coffee). Thanks again for listening, - John

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-762/script-recording-30674.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, John. You come across very credibly here. Smooth delivery and no trouble with all that techie lingo. Perhaps just a tad too fast, though it might be fine since your audience would certainly know what this is all about. Well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Quick. Zoom. Zip. On top of that, a lot of mouth clicks. The delivery of the words was good re: pronunciation and credibility, but completely rushed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,

    The spot had a nice pleasing feel to it, but it was perhaps just a little to fast. There should be a pause between Oxidation and Diffusion, because they are two distinct processes.

    Otherwise it sounded very nice.

    Keep up the good work.

    All the best,

    Scott

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    Silicon Valley Group

    Script:

    Silicon Valley Group designs, manufacturs, and markets technically sophisticated equipment used in the primary stages of semiconductor manufacturing. SVG’s product offerings include photoresist processing equipment; oxidation, diffusion, and low-pressure chemical vapor processing systems; and photolithography exposure tools that utilize step-and-scan technology.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    The contest is in the bag and congrats to the 2 winners KristinL and DeepWarmVoice. This was my entry. While evaluating all the entries (Right Richurd?) I noted what I thought the criteria was going to be. I almost posted it here, but thought better of it. I was happy to see that for the first time I understood (or was terribly lucky) the directions and didn't make any of the mistakes the judges mentioned. But I offer this as a regular read for a critique by all. Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment, all welcome. Nodo420

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-30229.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great! Sorry you didn't win. I don't always know how they choose the winners but I was too busy this time.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your read was more 'correct,' but that's not what wins. Many were better grammatically.
    This post-contest confusion continues. My only comment: we don't use compound sentences enough in conversation.

    Peer Feedback:

    I was just amazed at the fact that I got the directions right! I've been close, but like anything else, it's a skill. Reading... :) And I'd say the best won this week. I liked (the facebook like thing) all the entries that I thought could win. I picked 5, including the 2 winners. They were good. The contest is a fun way to get some audition practice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Man! I think you hit it right on the head. Our computer would not all me to listen to the winners for some reason.

    Nothing wrong with this one. You did the lists very well.

    Good job!

    All the best,

    Scott

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Just getting started in VO - any and all comments appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-30159.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very well done for just getting started. Voice and flow was good and once you remove the breaths, it will be a pretty solid submission.

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    Smart House

    Script:

    Imagine a house so smart that everything communicates
    Where bits and bites flow
    Turning everything possible
    Creating a Dream, a house...in ways you would never imagine.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear atperry845's recording

    This is an audition of a sample script that's due Mar 12 .Would like any info that would help land the job. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-41952/script-recording-78741.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Is it meant to sound a bit like a cyber assistant? The word "Flow" is drawn out in a very electronic fashion, otherwise it sounds good. I am sure someone else can get more pro technical advice but that stands out to me. Good luck

    Peer Feedback:

    the S sounds are very sibilant. Agree with the above that the word "flow" sounds odd. are you compression settings correct? It sounds a bit over-processed. if you fix that stuff up it should work. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there L. and W thanks for you comments . No cyber assistant , it was a dry read with only slight amplication added , no compression . Will work on sibilant s and fix 'flow ' . Best regards .

    Peer Feedback:

    The read is very choppy. You stuck in a comma after the first word where there is none. I would submit that the first line is one linear thought, without any pauses. You took two (a pause and a breath). And that's another thing that makes it choppy. Do you need to take 7 or 8 breaths for this copy? Goes to the "flow" issue, but in a different way than mentioned above. If you imagine a house with digital information "flowing" through it, the vocal delivery needs to be somewhat "fluid" as well.

    Bob mentioned the sibilant issue. There is also a bit of low level noise.

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    The Cloud

    Script:

    Many companies are turning to the cloud as a platform for innovation. The cloud represents new business models, greater efficiency, and unprecedented business agility.
    But no matter how compelling the cloud is, you can’t just replace your entire IT landscape. Cloud adoption is a journey.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-84890.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey psjones,
    Hope you are well. My first impression was that the recording is too hot. I'm definitely getting some clipping in my headphones. I like the tone of the read but I think it could use a bit of a mix. Maybe the soundtrack didn't quite match the script for me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Watch the long A (A platform) . "Uh platform" sounds more "natural". And "can't" was almost "kin't". Reminded me of the scene in "Singin' In The Rain". "Een eye kin't stan 'im!"

    What I'm hearing is the music bed masking the "liveness" of your recording environment. There is detectable room echo. The vocal is also a little "muddy" - some S's are not crisp and it's a little bassy.

    And I concur with atgallagher's perception that the "mix" is a little off. However, sometimes when the MP3's are transferred to the Edge site, music mixes suffer. Don't know why.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really wish you had used clean vocals. I can't tell if it's just the music but this sounds super dated. Like, I'm expecting you to sell me an AOL CD in the mail, not a cloud based technology. Can't tell if it's the music, the processing or the whole thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the others. the music just didn't seem to fit the copy. good read though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice, the music though overtook your delivery I thought. I agree with the others that is was heavy(too Bassy). .

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    Travel Website

    Script:

    Hate when you want to go on a vacation, but don't have time to plan it? Well we've solved that problem for you, and then some! Browse our website and take full advantage of our complimentary travelogues and destination guides. Click 'chat' anytime you'd like to speak with us!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eholland99's recording

    I would like to do my demo in my home studio but wanted to make sure that the audio quality is good enough for that. Please advise

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-40296/script-recording-77931.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not listening on the best speakers, but the quality seem fine as best as I can tell. Add a bit more excitement to your read. I think there is room for more emotion/inflections. Are you wanting to do a demo soon?

    Peer Feedback:

    You may receive many cautions about producing your own demo from a home studio.

    Unless you have a super quiet recording environment (a dead quiet space), some really good equipment (mic, interface, computer and software), have some mad audio engineering skills and are super confident with your self-direction (script breakdown, interpretation and acting skills), producing your own sub-par and non-competitive demo will not serve you well.

    Yes, having demos professionally produced can be an expensive proposition, but it is that investment in a career (as opposed to a hobby) that separates the professionals from the amateurs. If you're at all serious about pursuing VO, a professionally produced demo is a must, it shouldn't be done at home on the cheap. Agents, casting people and talent buyers (most clients) can tell right away if a demo has professionally produced or is home grown, and home grown won't get listened to past the first 3 - 5 seconds. The field is just too competitive. You will be doing yourself a disservice by producing your own home studio demo.

    Your home studio is probably (borderline) fine for recording auditions, but not for production - it does not have a "studio quality" sound. There is a hollowness to the recording with some auditory artifacts (possibly from some of the processing) and there is some ambient room echo. There is also a low level hiss, from either line noise or from your recording environment not being "dead" enough, or both.

    On the plus side, you have a very articulate, listenable, youthful voice with no discernible regionalism - that sought after Neutral American accent.

    However, there were a couple trouble spots:
    "wanna" instead of "want to"
    kind of missed the past tense of "solved"
    "advantage" was not fully formed - it may have been fine if most of the rest hadn't been so articulate.
    "Click 'chat'..." almost sounded like "Quick chat" - when dealing with a quote ('chat'), set it off by giving it a little space and a touch more emphasis.

    This copy is a combination of "inviting" and "call to action" requiring a lot of smile and personality in the voice and delivery. This was a little flat on both counts.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm hearing room ambiance. This is a problem that can be difficult and frustrating to remedy. For myself, I added sound deadening panels and still had ambience. I eventually filtered my output using iZotope RX4. It was the best purchase I've made in achieving professional sounding recordings. It's very transparent but needs to be added post recording.

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    Welcome To DataPlex

    Script:

    All of us here at DataPlex welcome you to our website in which we attempt to distill the essence of what we are all about ... helping our customers improve their use of distinct, complex and ever-changing technologies. In a nutshell, we increase their "tech worth" by evolving, integrating or expanding their existing systems and by strategically deploying new, state-of-the-art platforms.

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    Practicing for Demo CD. Please tell me what you think of the 3 takes and which one you like best. Thanks for your feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good job - three distinct reads!

    The first take is my favorite... friendly, easy to listen to.
    There were a couple of things that jumped out.
    "in a nutshell" sounded a bit over exaggerated (like a joke my dad would make... followed by an elbow to the ribs and a "get it?")
    strategically was fast. It was fine in the later cuts

    Second take: casual but a little fast and not enough emotion... sounds bored.

    Third take: serious and definitely emotionless but the pacing was good.

    Good luck on your demo!

    ~Melanie

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good strong voice with lots of resonance. The third take was my favorite because you are speaking to business people and I see that type of read as being more serious. I noticed there were some words that ended with i-n-g that you pronounced as if they ended with e-e-n. It's a common practice but the distinct Ing sound seems more appropriate to a businesslike read, in my opinion.
    Recording quality was very clear, but there was some hiss in the background.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job, Tom! Definitely distinct reads and all solid.

    1st read: professional, somewhat salesy voice. Proud. Pleased. Damn glad to meet ya!
    2nd read: more conversational (I agree that it's a touch fast.)
    3rd read: softer, kinda touchy-feely

    Hm. I like them all in different ways. However, the professional one was the easiest to follow along with (it's always nice not to have to work hard when listening :) ), and I wonder if that's why one often hears a professional voice with anything that has more jargon in it. My vote's the professional read but a smidge quieter and less sales-y. Not much different, just backing off a touch?

    Does my take match what you were going for? Which one do you like the best?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom,

    I think that you did a good job, I have to say that the 3rd one was my favorite. The thing that I would watch out for is that I can hear your breaths, if you can, you should edit them out.

    You have a really nice voice that is easy to listen to! Keep up the great work! I wish you the best of luck with your demo!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked number 3. Also, agree about the need to edit out the breaths.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree...#3 seemed to be the best of the 3. It was professional sounding but could be very slightly slower. For example "all of us" had all 3 words combined and "in a nutshell" sounded like "inna nutshell".

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    Wildsparq

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    Hi! I’m Stephanie, and I’m not only a vice president, but I’m the Wildsparq team leader for
    my company and I want to show you what Wildsparq has done for us.

    Ok ­ to back up a bit... we’ve done all the leadership conferences with popular names and have even read a few leadership books, but as you know, a few months later we’re searching again for the next thing... and that takes time.

    So when I heard about Wildsparq, I was hooked.... Let me show you.

    Ok.. so when you’re logged in, which is individual for everyone, you immediately see a snapshot of the whole organization ­ called the dashboard.

    I love the fact that the entire organization is learning together about leader development, not just our higher ups or new hires... EVERYONE! We have a common leadership lesson each month and that’s fun, interactive and sets my team up for great conversations.

    I can quickly see our entire company’s progress and even my own... (​THINKING, ALMOST TALKING TO YOURSELF)​ 380 points overall... not bad, but looks like Calvin is ahead in his work this month.
    Let’s see what lesson he’s on, ‘ I can do this as the team lead ‘.

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    High there, this is just one of the many an auditions I did today on voices.com. just interested on suggestions to make things better. Thanks,

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    Were there specs?

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job! I like the overall tone of delivery. In the beginning, there is room/opportunity to show more persuasion. As the "VP" and "team lead" I'd expect more enthusiasm...not over the top of course, but enthusiasm that shows a vested interest. I hope this is helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    No, they don't like specs.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks pacificview for the suggestion.

    Peer Feedback:

    There are some indications in the copy as to the tone the client may require for this. The biggest one is that two sentences begin with "Ok". And others are "Let's see" and "Let me show you". And 'Hi" instead of "Hello". So it's a little colloquial and personal - like you're talking to a specific person in a relaxed, yet semi-formal way (as the boss).

    Also it's kind of an inspirational pep talk. So, it pushes the boundary of enthusiasm without being too gung ho.

    The read was very good as a foundation. Goose up the warmth and smile and inject just a touch more energy into it. Lift the end of some of the sentences, especially from the get go - in a positive way. Not necessarily an upward inflection, just a lighter, friendlier, more positive mood.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. My voice naturally has a very serious tone to it. So it seems that even when I'm afraid I've gone over the top, too happy/positive, warm, enthusiastic/energy, I haven't. So I can still work a lot on that.

    Peer Feedback:

    A good acting exercise is to go beyond what you think it should be and dial it back. Much easier for a director to pull you back than draw it out.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'll try that.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought that this was overall a good read. My voice also naturally has a serious tone to it. So I now realize that I need to go beyond what I think it should be and then dial it back.

    Peer Feedback:

    Generally a very bad idea to post scripts for jobs that have not yet been done. This material might be NDA-covered or copyrighted and by posting here, you risk two things: prosecution for posting copyrighted or NDA material...AND you risk losing the job you might have otherwise gotten based on the previous point.

    Always a bad idea to post current audition material on the forum.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the heads up Tom. I'll keep that in mind and stick to scripts on this website, or ones that I make from now on.
    I didn't see any indication that an NDA was involved, and I'm sure I won't be getting the job. They heard it and didn't give a thumbs up. But I should play it safe.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, honestly, I felt it was a little too stilted, it needed to come off more conversationally, and most importantly friendly. Because you're not just acting as the VP of this company, but more importantly a rep for Wildsparq!

    There wasn't enough "team builder" spirit in this, which is what this copy is all about -the WHOLE company getting together and on the same page, working towards goals and, apparently having fun in the meantime.

    Your "Not bad" should have been less dismayed, and more like "Yea! Our employees are doing this regularly, and in fact they're even ahead..." But you have to do it coyly... you're boasting, but on the DL.

    Keep it up! You'll get there :)

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    A lot of scripts here are transcribed from existing spots on the air which kinda gives some leeway in that they're not covered by NDAs and not posted by the talent which did the spot. On the negative side, the transcriptions are more often than not...badly transcribed with questionable syntax and or wording. But that's the nature of practice scripts on the Edge forum.

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    Thanks for the comments, guys.

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    William L. Berry

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    William L. Berry Co.
    The aesthetic dimension of human experience involves all our perceptions. Elements of shape, line, color, and texture inform our quest for beauty. They also influence our choice of a personal environment, and this is why the place we call home becomes an extension of ourselves. Naturally, we demand the best ... in form ... in structure ... in design, and will accept no less. Homes created by William L. Berry adhere to the same standards of aesthetic excellence. They radiate quality ... because they are “Masterpieces of the Builder’s Art.”

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    Hello! This was a very different type of narration text, so it proved to be a real challenge for me. Did it work? Thanks for all comments, sweet or sour! All the best, Scott

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    Nicely done I thought and it is a departure for you. I have a couple of comments, first, I had the "superman hearing" headset on so I heard the overhead noise, but I know you are working on that. Capping that noise at the top end would do it, so you almost have that down.

    The read showed a lot of emotion, but it sounded a little breathy in parts, not breaths, but the mid range of your voice trails off. I see the effect you want to create, just be careful when you do "...accept no less..." (I did a terrible job of explaining what I mean here, Sorry! :))

    I might read this in a slightly different manner, the same emotion but perhaps a little "statelier" I go to the worn out example of telling a friend...The first line is a statement of fact, that the rest of the spot depends. I wouldn't inflect so much on that line, yet put it out there to stand on it's own, then the rest of the lines draw from that feeling you created with the first statement. But then again, I'm probably overthinking it.

    You can do this sort of material! Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Nodo for the encouragement!

    This is text that I would never say in "real life" other than reading a VO. It was in the narration section but it could almost be a commercial.

    all the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    It is a commercial, using a piece of narration.

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    Any comments are welcome!

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    Breath on the start and I am hearing some popping on the Ps. For example, "...makes it Possible..." has a bit of a blast on the P. The spacing between words could be tightened up a bit. For me the volume is about right.

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    3COM

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    Nearly twenty years ago, 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology for networking personal computers. Today, 3Com is a company that maintains its leadership role with innovative solutions spanning the scope of communications. From the global enterprise to the neighborhood business, from the Internet point of presence to the home office, 3Com systems and products put computing resources within easy reach of millions of users worldwide. 3Com combines cutting edge research and development with world-class manufacturing facilities, and international service and support.

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    A Promo Linux Operating System Script

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    Linux Mint Debian 10 “Julia”
    An elegant and comfortable operating system both powerful and simple to use.
    One of the most dependable computing solutions in the world.

    With Linux Mint Debian 10 “Julia”
    Enjoy powerful, out of the box features Such as
    Full multimedia support with extreme easy of uses.
    Access to over 30,000 Software solutions Most free of charge.
    The safe and reliable computing, powered and protected by the Linux Architecture
    And Free Open Source Community support.

    All this and more for absolutely no charge!
    Linux Mint Debian 10 “Julia”
    From Freedom Came Elegance.

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    Advantage Technology

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    Welcome to Advantage Technology Incorporated and to the excitement and challenges of a growing business. As a new employee, your job is important to us. Your success is an important factor in the success of this company. This software is designed to offer you accurate information about company policies and procedures, benefit packages, performance reviews, training, and education opportunities.

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    Advantech

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    “Advantech’s five business units are involved with every aspect of daily life to help realize your dreams. Inspired by the vision of a ubiquitous and connected world, each product is designed with this clear concept in mind. Advantech brings new technologies and groundbreaking applications to many fields, like medical care, digital home, transportation, factory automation, and video surveillance.”

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    Advantech 2

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    Advantech offers a complete selection of full height, fault resilient rack mount and wallmount chassis for mission critical applications. A complete range of compact, fanless, and rugged embedded box computers offer a simple, modularized design for any environment.

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    Aetna Select Choice Plan

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    The benefits and services available to you as a member of the Select Choice plan have been designed with your personal health in mind. Our goal is to provide you and your family with convenient, comprehensive health services, and to protect you from the high cost of both routine preventive care and major illness. Please keep your Select Choice Member Card with you. The number on the card is your member number. You may be asked this number when seeking services from Select Choice providers, and when calling Aetna Health Plans with questions relating to your coverage.

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    Aflac

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    As health care costs have escalated, so has the demand for AFLAC's products. To meet that need, we have continued to develop new insurance products and to enhance existing policies. At the same time, we have expanded our distribution system of agencies and sales associates. We have also aggressively promoted the AFLAC brand through effective advertising.

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    AIG

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    The Greatest Risk Is Not Taking One. They gave up everything. Their families. Their friends. Their homes. The villages they were born in. They arrived with only the clothes on their backs. Vulnerable. Scared. But brimming with hope and determined that a better life was within their grasp. Today, risk takers don't have to go after their dreams alone. They can rely on a business partner to help them through uncharted waters. An organization with unsurpassed insight and financial resources. One with the ability and flexibility to design specific solutions to help minimize risk for almost any business undertaking. So the next time you decide to venture into new territory for an idea you believe in, call AIG. We're best equipped to help you manage the uncertainties that go along with the pursuit of hopes and dreams.

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    Ambit

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    Ambit Corporate Presentation
    Now why should you start an Ambit business? If you’re not sure, ask yourself these
    questions:
    • How secure do you feel about the future of your job?
    • Could you use some additional income?
    • Are you completely debt-free?
    • Would you like more time with your family?
    • If you were disabled today, could you maintain your lifestyle for 6 months?
    • Are you saving enough for your children’s or grandchildren’s education?
    • Are you living in the house and the neighborhood of your dreams?
    • Are you secure for a retirement of comfort?
    Maybe you’ve never thought about these things before. Or maybe you think about these
    things all the time. Whichever it is, let me ask you another question. “Do you use electricity?”
    Everyone uses electricity, right? Because of that, I can show you how to:
    • Earn unlimited income with flexible working hours.
    • Get paid in the future for the work you do now.
    • Work from home and spend more time with your family and friends.
    • Take control of your financial future and inspire others.
    Sound good? Then let me tell you about an income opportunity like no other.
    In the next half-hour, we’ll discuss the how
    • the right Company
    • in an expanding Industry
    • offers the perfect Product
    • that can offer you the greatest Opportunity for success.
    Our company's vision is focused on your success.

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    Amica Life Insurance Company

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    Amica Life Insurance Company was incorporated in 1968 as a wholly-owned subsidiary of Amica Mutual Insurance. Our goal was to further broaden the types of financial protection available to Amica policyholders. We believe in a consistent, conservative philosophy of investment, which translates into a strong and stable company for our policyholders. Amica Life has never invested in real estate, mortgages, or junk bonds. Over 98% of the company’s bonds are investment grade. Careful selection and underwriting of business have resulted in extremely low mortality experience and claims costs.

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    Amica Life Insurance Company 2

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    We believe Amica policyholders are well-informed individuals capable of making their own decisions. We sell life insurance with a no-pressure approach. Our job is to guide policyholders to the type and amount of insurance that will provide the necessary protection. We strive to provide quality, value-oriented products. Our salaried representatives are trained to help you answer life insurance questions. You can count on receiving the same consistent, high level of service that has distinguished the Amica name.

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    Apple Computer

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    Apple Computer began with a simple idea: That the power of computing should be available and accessible to everyone. On that premise, the personal computer revolution was launched. Our vision of empowering the individual remains the driving force behind Apple, and we continue to deliver information tools that enhance the way people work, learn, and play. Apple has grown by broadening its scope beyond the desktop computer to encompass software, printers and peripherals, portable computers, and beyond. Apple's products are designed to work the way people do, allowing them to creatively explore and share ideas. This innovative approach has resulted in the sale of more than 20 million APPLE MACINTOSH systems.

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    Aventis 2

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    Everyone wants to live life freely. Unfortunately, for more than 5 million people around the world that’s just not possible. Simple movement that most of us take for granted is quite painful to them. They suffer from rheumatoid arthritis. At Aventis, one of the world’s leading pharmaceutical companies, our scientists are combining their in-depth know-how with new technologies to develop more innovative anti-rheumatic treatments. One of our most important goals is to fight the causes of rheumatoid arthritis, not only its symptoms – so that people are free to enjoy whatever moves them.

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    Banking E-learning 1

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    When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page for all client interactions. Please confirm the following information – Client Name, Date of Birth, and Social Security Number – before continuing.

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    Banking – E-learning 4

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    In this example, you’ll explore the structure of Trades. First you’ll click through set of real portfolios. Then you’ll open a new window showing the first level in the portfolio hierarchy. Click ‘Structure’ to open the details.

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    Banking– E-learning 3

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    If you are unsure about the procedures for changing a contract’s terms and conditions, please review ‘Lesson 5: Terms and Conditions’. In this lesson, you will follow a fictional character, Renee, as she determines whether or not a contract should be modified.

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    Baxter Industries

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    Baxter Industries has made significant progress since it announced last November a series of strategic actions to reduce costs, improve shareholder value, and extend its leadership position worldwide. The actions address the dramatic changes underway in the U.S. health-care system, and accelerate growth of the company’s medical-technology businesses worldwide. Baxter has reorganized its U.S. sales force into cross-divisional, regional teams. This customer-driven initiative establishes a sales structure that mirrors the emerging health-care networks, and a team-selling approach that provides customers with one primary point of contact.

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    Baxter Industries 2

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    Biotechnology is transforming the theory and practice of medicine, and Baxter has a clear objective in this field. The company intends to be the leading world provider of selected products and services dedicated to curing disease through biotechnology. The strategy is to build on strong existing positions in blood therapy and related areas while investing heavily in emerging gene therapies and immunotherapies. “The biotechnology business is growing very quickly,” says Timothy B. Anderson, group vice president. “Our sales in Baxter’s Biotech Group were close to $1 billion in 2014, and doubled by the end of the decade.”

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    Baxter Industries 3

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    The cost pressures on Baxter’s U.S. hospital customers translate directly to the company as the country’s largest distributor of medical products. Baxter’s U.S. medical-products sales make up about half of the company’s total sales volume. But the changing environment also offers opportunities, in part because Baxter has invested heavily in the last three years in programs to help hospitals reduce their costs. Cumulatively, these programs saved U.S. hospitals more than $200 million last year. Baxter has more products than any other supplier.

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    Brand Video

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    Helitech has and remains to be an industry leader in foundation repair and waterproofing solutions to residential homeowners for over 25 years. While they’ve expanded into 5 states, their still a family owned business that takes pride in providing long term, quality solutions to every homeowner.

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    Brother Office Equipment

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    Business today is all about communications. Needless to say, a single networked imaging device is not always the best way to facilitate that communication-especially if you plan to grow your business. That's why we offer a full range of intelligent Multi Function Center solutions designed to optimize the productivity of any person or department in your company. More than print, fax, copy and scan, we have some models with features like duplexing, networkability and expandable paper tray capability.

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    Business Management Software Video

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    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes. To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels.

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    New to the business. Any help, voice wise or studio wise, would be of great help. Thanks.

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    Tom, this delivery felt very much as a read script instead of a smooth conversational delivery. It's ok to vary pace a little here and there in the conversational style, but this had a choppy feel to the read.

    Good luck. relax and practice and see how it works out.

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    3Com

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    3-com
    Nearly twenty years ago, 3Com Corporation launched a new industry by developing the first technology for networking personal computers. Today, 3Com is a company that maintains its leadership role with innovative solutions spanning the scope of communications. From the global enterprise to the neighborhood business, from the Internet point of presence to the home office, 3Com systems and products put computing resources within easy reach of millions of users worldwide. 3Com combines cutting edge research and development with world-class manufacturing facilities, and international service and support.

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    How does my home studio sound? How does my voice & delivery sound? If OK, whats my next step? What categories do you suggest come demo time?

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    Sorry...heard the echo...couldn't take it seriously.

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    I am a new student. I recorded the attached MP3 using the same Logitech USB headphone/mic that I use to conduct online webinars for my clients. I used Audacity to make the recording. Obviously, there is some "hum" in the background. I know this can be caused by impedence mis-match, but don't know if that's the case with today's USB microphones and laptop computers. I would like to know how to make my recordings sound better -- what should I use instead of the Logitech headset, and any other suggestions please. Thanks.

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    You sound relaxed in the delivery, but it's paced a bit quick. You're talking to people about money...I sure wouldn't want a fast talker handling MY affairs!

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    How am I doing? How can I best market myself? How can I get on the list of voice actors at Edge? I am here in New York City.

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    Good interpretation of all the varieties of copy, a few of your words do get muddied, the first "once" in Disney, the "spend" in Michigan spot, the Ace Commercial is great, as well as the Ace Hardware. Recording quality nice, like the music.

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    Citi turns 200

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    Citi turns 200 this year.
    So why should that be of any interest to you?
    Well in that time
    There have been some good days and some difficult ones.
    But through it all we’ve persevered, supporting some of the biggest ideas in modern history.
    Like the Trans-Atlantic cable
    That connected continents,
    And the Panama Canal that made our world a smaller place.
    We supported the Marshall Plan that helped Europe regain its strength, and pioneered the ATM so you can get cash when you want it.
    It’s been our privilege to back ideas like these and the leaders behind them.
    So why should our anniversary matter to you?
    Because for 200 years we’ve been helping people and their ideas move from ambition to achievement.
    And the next great idea could be yours.

    Original Commercial:
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ue3024EekwY

    Contributed by Richurd

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    Cities

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    Cities are increasingly becoming recognized as the locus of economic and social development. The world has reached a tipping point, where half the world's population is already living in cities. Nearly 2 billion new urban residents are expected in the next 20 years, 90% of them in developing countries.
    Gone are the days when urbanization was widely perceived as a problem that must be prevented. There is now an emerging consensus of its benefits as overall, cities provide 70% of global Gross Domestic Product. Cities CAN be engines of economic growth and expand national and individual prosperety

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    City Harvest

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    Millions of pounds of good, edible food are thrown away each year by New York City food businesses. At the same time, an estimated 1.5 million people are hungry, one third of them children. City Harvest is the link between those who have so much and those who have too little. City Harvest is committed to feeding hungry people in New York City using a variety of innovative, practical and cost-effective methods. Our primary approach is to rescue food that otherwise would be wasted and deliver it to those who serve the hungry. City Harvest strives to be a model for others to fight hunger in their communities.

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    CKE Restaurants

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    What started in 1941, as a single hot dog cart in Los Angeles, with first-day receipts of $14.75- has grown to one of the largest companies in the United States, operating and franchising quick-service restaurants with systemwide sales that topped $3.16 billion last year. Today, CKE Restaurants, Inc., based in Santa Barbara, Calif., operates the Hardee's and Carl's Jr. brands through its subsidiaries, franchisees and licensees.

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    Clarins

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    Welcome to the Clarins Family. It is our objective to provide you with a warm and exciting environment filled with opportunity and growth. We attribute the success of the company to our “Commitment to Excellence” and our commitment to people.

    This presentation will serve as a guide for all general information to assist its employees. The topics we will cover today include Employee Benefit Program Highlights, Company Policies as well as Personal Policies. Please follow along with the provided employee handbook.

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    Conflicts of Interest

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    Let's get started with an overview of conflicts of interest. The simplest way to understand conflicts of interests, is to remember that we all have a duty always act in the interests of the company, and NOT for our own personal benefit. Do not enter into situations where your actions might create a conflict, either actual OR potential, between personal gain, and company obligations. These are called 'Conflicts of Interest." If a conflict of interest arises, please disclose it immediately and let others decide how to proceed.

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    Conflicts of Interest

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    Let's get started with an overview of conflicts of interest. The simplest way to understand conflicts of interests, is to remember that we all have a duty always act in the interests of the company, and NOT for our own personal benefit. Do not enter into situations where your actions might create a conflict, either actual OR potential, between personal gain, and company obligations. These are called 'Conflicts of Interest." If a conflict of interest arises, please disclose it immediately and let others decide how to proceed.

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    DataPlex Welcome Video

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    All of us here at DataPlex welcome you to our website in which we attempt to distill the essence of what we are all about ... helping our customers improve their use of disparate, complex and ever-changing technologies. In a nutshell, we increase their "tech worth" by evolving, integrating or expanding their existing systems and by strategically deploying new, state-of-the-art platforms.

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    Davidson Incorporated

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    Davidson Inc. is a leading publisher and distributor of multimedia software for both the home and school markets. The company is internationally renowned for its award-winning consumer titles, such as the Blaster series, which has sold over 3 million copies. In the school market, Davidson is best known for interactive multimedia systems including Story Club, English Express, and the upcoming Vital Links. Vital Links is a multimedia U.S. history system for the middle grades being developed by Davidson, Addison-Wesley, and the Los Angeles County Office of Education via a grant from the states of California, Florida, and Texas.

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    Davidson Incorporated 2

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    2013 was a banner year for our company. Our revenues increased 49% over the prior year to a record $87.9 million. This growth occurred in all sectors of the company -- from consumer, school, international and affiliated label sales, to divisions such as Educational Resources -- and was achieved primarily through the release of new products, selective acquisitions, and strong fourth-quarter sales. In addition to excellent financial results, we’re excited about our accomplishments in delivering upon our studio strategy business model. We began building on this business model in the early 2000s, when we adopted the studio strategy...

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    Deloitte & Touche USA LLP--Getting Ready For The Aging Consumer

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    What you need to know. In 2008, the dominant customers in the U.S. and the world will be consumers age 50 and older. Regardless of your industry or sector, you could prosper by focusing on these aging consumers and understanding their evolving needs.
    New research, a podcast and articles from Deloitte & Touche USA LLP can help
    you understand these older consumers-what they want, how their needs will
    change over the years and how your business can serve them best.

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    Disruptive Innovation

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    How does a small, young company beat an industry giant on its own turf?

    Disruptive innovation.

    It works like this: Big players focus on sustaining innovation, upgrading existing products and services to attract higher-paying customers.

    Disruptive innovation creates new markets and reshapes existing ones.

    To achieve growth in a fast-changing world, you want to be a disruptor. Don’t be disrupted.

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    Division Of Marketing Practices

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    The Division of Marketing Practices responds quickly and decisively to the rapidly changing world of fraudulent marketing practices. It enforces federal consumer protection laws by filing actions in federal district court on behalf of the Commission to stop scams; prevent scam artists from repeating their fraudulent schemes in the future; freeze their assets; and obtain compensation for scam victims. The Division also files administrative cases with the Commission to stop these scams.

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    Dove

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    New Dove Face Essential Nutrients Pillows are revolutionary. Add water, and they foam with a nutrient-enriched lather. The textured side removes dull skin. The other side gently cleans new skin. Leaving your face glowing with health. They're a lot of care in one little package. Learn more at www.dove.com.

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    Employee Orientation Excerpt

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    Let's transition away from the Design Center and make our way to the Sales Counter. While the visual aspects of the Sales Counter are not going to generate quite as many "wow's" from our customers that the Design Centers will - making sure they are kept clean and organized is very important to appealing to our customer's perception that frequent the Sales Counter - namely the Contractors. The Counter Sales staff need to be diligent about keeping the counters themselves cleared and neat. Point of Purchase displays are supplied with important information and should only be placed in appropriate locations on the counter. Making sure the floors are kept clean and free of debris - especially since the warehouse is very near the Sales Counter - also requires diligence. Stocked merchandise placed around the Sales Counter like caulk displays, Care and Maintenance products, tools and accessories as well as transition strips all need to be kept properly stocked and neatly organized. Most of the orders are placed at the Sales Counter and as a result most of the payments get processed there as well. We need to make sure those areas where that kind of money is handled are kept clean.

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    Employee Training

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    Our compensation plan is designed to support our vision, values, and growth objectives. This plan allows us to win and retain key talent to support our growth and help us best succeed as an organization. The key to our compensation package is performance. We pay people differently based on their individual skills, experience, and performance, as well as company results.

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    Employee Training

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    Our compensation plan is designed to support our vision, values, and growth objectives. This plan allows us to win and retain key talent to support our growth and help us best succeed as an organization. The key to our compensation package is performance. We pay people differently based on their individual skills, experience, and performance, as well as company results.

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    Environmental Defense

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    Finding new ways to solve environmental problems is nothing new to us. In fact, that’s how we got started. Thirty years ago, we were [Environmental Defense was] just a small group of friends living on Long Island. Lawyers and scientists by profession, we were united by a shared concern for the natural world. When we learned that beautiful birds, who had graced our island for centuries, were suddenly unable to reproduce, we knew we had to do something.

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    Ethan Allen

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    Fashion you relish. Quality you expect. Service you can depend on. Furnishings you can afford. Choices galore. This is the colorful image of Ethan Allen we want consumers to know. The wide spectrum of our image is expressed in many ways: through our galleries, our advertising, and our team of professionals who represent Ethan Allen. But is our image clearly visible to consumers? How can we ensure that Ethan Allen’s true colors shine through? Building a strong image that withstands the test of time takes imagination, innovation, and participation. Those who have succeeded in maintaining a colorful, appealing image have followed a simple rule.

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    Expense Report Training

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    After completing your timesheet, hit the Next button and the Expense Report screen appears. This screen allows you to add any expenses that you might have incurred during your current timesheet. Mileage and expenses can be changed by hitting the plus and minus buttons.

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    Explainer video for website

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    For a manufacturer: Visibility, Performance and Predictability are paramount to success.

    But how do industry professionals in sewn products manufacturing meet the challenges of reducing cycle times, increasing productivity, and delivering greater quality at lower costs?

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    Fannie Mae Mortgages

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    This video will discuss Fannie Mae’s new mortgage outreach program, targeting low-income families, minorities, and immigrants. The nation’s biggest source of mortgages plans to guarantee $150 billion in loans over the next seven years, and reach out to five million families who would otherwise be shut out of home ownership. It is creating a big incentive for banks to lend to these borrowers. But lurking behind this PR coup are two bits of smart economics. First, Fannie is mining a huge, untapped market of low-income renters who are excellent credit risks. Contrary to popular belief, says Prudential Securities analyst Thomas O’Donnell, “Poor people pay their bills. They are not cynical or sophisticated enough to go to bankruptcy lawyers.”

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    Federal Emergency Management Agency

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    Although many agencies of the Federal government have responsibilities of varying degrees relating to disasters, the Federal Emergency Management Agency, or FEMA, is the central point of contact within the Federal government for a wide range of emergency management activities in both peace and war. Simply stated, FEMA exists to save lives and property. FEMA’s mission statement summarizes its responsibility: “Under the direction of the President, the mission of FEMA is to plan for and coordinate the protection of the civilian population and resources of the nation, to include planning and continuity of government in time of emergency.”

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    Feed the Beast

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    Feed the Beast
    You’re a cog in the wheel of a
    Corporate world.
    An expendable, replaceable
    Valueless tool.
    Go to work.
    Grease the wheel.
    Never let it stop.
    Production is our God
    And before it you must kneel.
    We offer you a living
    and pay you with a promise.
    and when you tire out we’ll
    Get another fool.
    You have a little dream
    And you want to make it work.
    It’s yours for the taking
    But we’ll put it out of reach.
    So go to work.
    Grease the wheel.
    Never let it stop.
    Production is your God
    And before it you must kneel.

    Feed The Beast 2nd Vocal
    The Market’s going to crash.
    So we need to hoard some cash.
    Don’t want to go to jail
    So we’ll get the working stiff to post our massive bail.
    We’ll crush their tiny dreams
    For living beyond their means
    And foreclose on their their homes.
    The stupid little gnomes
    The country’s going to fail as an economic power
    But the corporation will see it’s finest hour
    We got deregulation
    To stimulate and feed the nation
    Instead we filled our pockets
    And fed the corporation
    The trouble with the government
    Is none of our concern.
    The economy is dower
    But we’re an economic tower
    We’re arrogant manipulators
    Managed by the best.
    So we’ll never go to jail
    Cause we’re just too big to fail.

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    Florian Papp

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    For over 100 years Florian Papp has offered only the finest antiques and works of art, which covers a multitude of periods and styles from around the world. Browse our web site. They are updated regularly, and contain all of our pieces as well as recent acquisitions. We value the craftsmanship and design of centuries past, and we make it available to you with a little help from the future.

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    Florida Building Code

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    Section 1201, Florida Building Code, 2007 Edition, Existing Building volume adopted by Sec. 13.01 is hereby amended to read as follows:
    Section 1201

    Relocated or Moved Buildings

    1201.3.2. Application and Fee Deposit. Application for a Permit for moving a building or structure shall be in writing on a form prescribed by the Building Official and in accordance with approved City procedures. Each application shall be accompanied by a Permit fee of one hundred dollars ($100.00) and a deposit of one hundred dollars ($100.00) for cost of processing the application in accordance with this section. If the application results in a Permit being issued, the one hundred dollars ($100.00) shall be refunded, but the one hundred dollars ($100.00) cost deposit shall be retained to cover cost of processing the application and no portion of the one hundred dollars ($100.00) cost deposit shall be refunded to the applicant.

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    Fugro

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    Fugro believes in the value of up-to-date 3D digital asset information

    On large industrial sites, many sources of 2D & 3D information co-exist and are used by specialist software and suitably skilled users.

    Engineers and maintenance departments need to be able to rely on as-built data like Terrestrial Laser Scans, 3D Models, Panoramic images and annotations.

    Fugro presents a solution towards keeping the 3D digital asset information up-to-date by offering 3 services:
    - 3D measurement service,
    - data management service and
    - webservice.

    This way stakeholders can work:
    - more efficiently
    - more safely
    - and with a higher level of quality.

    HOW IT WORKS

    Field data is acquired and validated in a continuous process by the 3D measurement service.

    SITE-SPOT is designed for frequent updates and accommodates your laser scan history.

    Authorized users are able to navigate through the 3D virtual environment.
    Clever tools create value by simplifying daily operational processes.
    Tools within SITE-SPOT include:
    - measurement,
    - annotation,
    - inspection,
    - and reporting, such as the creation of cross-sections,
    - additionally, users have access to an advanced query system to select and view model data in both 2D and 3D.

    Join some of the leading industrial sites in the world by improving your digital asset information with SITE-SPOT. Visit fugrositespot.com for more information and request a demonstration.

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    GE Medical Systems Employee Video

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    Although the controlled use of ionizing radiation is widespread and highly beneficial, employees may regard its potential for harm too casually. Most exposures are harmless, but above certain levels, ionizing radiation can be very dangerous.

    The purpose of this video is to increase your knowledge of ionizing radiation and to help you develop safe work habits. When working with ionizing radiation technology, you’re the person most responsible for your safety.

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    Geek Sqaud Tech Support

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    If you're watching this you might be dealing with some kind of computer problem; Networking issues, a virus your afraid to touch, a piece of software that refuses to install. Whatever it is; it stinks. But we have some good news. You can get this problem taken care of and prevent problems still to come with your own personal Geek Squad Agent on call 24/7. It’s called Geek Squad Tech support and it will cover three PCs, Macs, or Tablets no matter where you bought them.

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    Getty Center

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    “We shall be a city upon a hill,” prophesied the Puritan leader John Winthrop more than 300 years ago, and ever since, those words have remained a metaphor for American idealism. Now Los Angeles can claim our country’s latest, most stupendous incarnation of that vision: the Getty Center. Set high upon the foothills of the Santa Monica Mountains and commanding a spectacular panorama of the sprawling metropolis below it and the Pacific Ocean beyond, that multiuse fine-arts complex finally opens to the public on December 16, after thirteen years of design and construction at an estimated cost of $1 billion.

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    Gillette Centers

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    In 1997, The Gillette Company embarked upon an extraordinary path when it awarded a gift of five million dollars to a strategic joint venture of the Dana-Farber Cancer Institute, the Brigham and Women’s Hospital, and the Massachusetts General Hospital to establish The Gillette Centers for Women’s Cancers at Dana-Farber/Partners Cancer Care. The Gillette gift, which is not just for bricks and mortar, is an investment in fundamental research and innovative therapies for early detection, prevention, and cure of women’s cancers. This investment is meant to serve families well beyond the Boston area, and it is the Company’s hope that when the cure for women’s cancers is found, it will be the result of the world-class research being conducted at The Gillette Centers for Women’s Cancers.

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    Glaxo Zantac

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    Zantac was the largest selling pharmaceutical product in the world for the seventh consecutive year. Revenue growth of 20% was achieved during the year, aided by the development of alternative dosage forms and new indications. Its contribution to total group sales remained unchanged at 44%. The treatment of milder forms of peptic acid disease offers a further growth opportunity for Zantac. Our recently announced intention to form a joint venture with Warner-Lambert Company to develop, seek approval for, and market over-the-counter (OTC) versions of Glaxo prescription medicines should enable the value of Zantac in the market sector to be realized.

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    Google Analytics

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    Google Analytics gives you rich insights into your website’s traffic and marketing effectiveness. Powerful, flexible, and easy-to-use features let you reach your customers in entirely new ways.

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    Hartford 401k

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    Right now you're facing one of the most important decisions you'll make for your company. Choosing the right retirement benefits for employees can be difficult even for the most experienced business person. With so much on the line, it's important to select a company like Hartford Life Insurance Company. We have the experienced people who can help simplify the complexities of a qualified plan, a well-designed program to make sponsoring a retirement plan easy, including an array of investment choices with solid performance histories - all at a very competitive price.

    When you choose to team up with Hartford Life, you'll get our trademark service excellence. We'll provide you and your employees world class investment choices, customer service, and education materials. We offer your Pension Administrator electronic links to your participant-level investment data easily and efficiently.

    We'd like to deliver for you as well, so we're pleased to present this proposal for our premier defined contribution program. Our program offers the solid foundation you would expect from an industry leader: a wide array of investment choices, customer service support, timely and accurate recordkeeping and reporting, the latest technology, including internet access, effective employee communication and competitive pricing.

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    HCL Technologies Meeting opener

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    Physics. The study of matter and its motion through the universe. It’s one of the oldest academic disciplines. And humans continue to question and search … reach and advance …

    One of the most important measures in physics is velocity.
    Velocity is not just speed – it is the speed of an object in a calculated direction. Precise. Focused. Razor sharp.

    Velocity is… power in motion.

    Sight the target ahead.
    Calculate your course.
    Take your mark.

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    Healthyplace.com

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    At HealthyPlace.com, we believe the more you understand about Schizophrenia, the more likely you are to get the full benefit of treatment. We want to help you learn as much as you can about this devastating illness and to offer you the support you need to begin treatment.

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    HighFi

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    With HighFi, IT teams program networks in real-time to ensure the highest quality for business apps. IT operations serve ever-growing number of devices without worry, by predicting network issues before they actually happen. By adapting to the ever-changing nature of all things connected, IT security offers the best defense for BYOD and IoT.

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    Hoechst Celanese Employee Training Film

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    Here at Hoechst Celanese, we make chemicals. The chemicals we make are used in turn by other companies to make the products we come in contact with every day. Hello, I'm (insert name), and for the next few minutes, we're going to take a look at just some of the many ways Hoechst Celanese Chemical Group's products are used to make the things that touch our lives. We all know that matter is made up of tiny particles called molecules. Every drop contains about a quadrillion billion molecules. In turn, molecules are made up of atoms. Water molecules for instance contain two hydrogen atoms and one oxygen atom. All molecules have a characteristic shape. For instance, H2O molecules are triangular. What then is a chemical reaction? It is a rearrangement of molecules. When chemicals react, molecules break apart and rearrange, sometimes combining with bits and pieces of other molecules to become new substances. That's what happens to most of the molecules we produce: they're split apart, broken into pieces, and converted into new molecules.

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    Home Depot (training Film For Puerto Rico)

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    Customer service has always been important at The Home Depot. Without customers there wouldn’t be a Home Depot. Today when we say customers first, we mean helping customers first. Helping people as if they were friends or family. Helping people in a way that builds customer relationships and strengthens our foundation of service.

    Introducing First, a blueprint for making excellent service a reality in The Home Depot stores.

    First is a specific set of behaviors that tells us how to help customers, it will be part of every customer interaction. First stops talking about service and actually makes it happen. Service that makes customers come back to us year after year. Are you ready?

    First things first.

    The first letter of First is F and it means find the customer and help the customer find the product.

    Actively seek customers out and take charge of helping them find what they need.

    One, find the customer. If you’re not tasking don’t sit back and wait for customers to find you, actively look for and find them.

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    Honda

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    It’s not often a two-hour ride lasts a lifetime. Talk to most motorcyclists, and they’ll tell you how one ride can get inside of you, and stay with you forever. This same phenomenon happens on another level at every Ride for Kids event. Each ride works to improve the lives of kids who have been diagnosed with childhood brain tumors by raising funds for medical research.
    Our progress is encouraging. In 1984, a child diagnosed with a brain tumor was expected to live only five more months. Today, medical advancements have allowed that child to live another three years.
    With Honda’s support, more than 10,000 motorcyclists devote their time, money and energy to the Ride for Kids program every year. Yet everyone’s goal of finding the cause of childhood brain tumors, and discovering a cure, remains many rides away. Which is why Honda continues to nurture this program. Because, while the ride lasts only a day, it leaves us with hope that last a lifetime. Honda. The power of dreams.

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    Hybrid Cars

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    If you are having a tough time separating hybrid truth from reality, you're not alone. The warp-speed adoption of hybrids into popular culture -- and into hundreds of thousands of American driveways -- has produced more than a little confusion and misinformation. Most industry analysts predict the continued growth of gas-electric vehicles, with estimates ranging from 800,000 to 1,000,000 hybrid sales in the U.S. by 2015, so this is a good time to debunk the 10 most prevalent myths about hybrid cars.

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    IBM

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    IBM has earned a reputation for honest, ethical dealing in all aspects of its business. As a government contractor, the Systems Integration Division is dedicated to maintaining a similar reputation in the Federal procurement environment. The basis of this reputation is IBM’s conviction that ethical behavior and competitiveness are not mutually exclusive. What’s more, IBM has shown that a corporation can adhere to a set of consistent principles and still be flexible enough to meet changing business conditions. In fulfilling our goal of serving the national interest by offering equipment and services to the Federal government...

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    IBM PS/1

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    Like many people, you may have discovered that your place to do business is right in your own backyard. The IBM PS/1 is perfect for you. It runs the software small businesses need. The PS/1 is expandable, so it can grow as your business grows, even outside your home. And because it’s from IBM, it’s compatible with most business computers. But the PS/1 fits into your life, too. It’s remarkably easy to set up and use. Best of all, it comes with the service and support you can only expect from IBM.

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    Industrial Technologies

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    Industrial Technologies designs, develops, and markets censoring, monitoring, processing, and inspection technologies, that operate under demanding factory floor conditions found in a wide range of industries. The Company’s products are specifically designed to improve the overall quality of industrial operations. Current customers include leading aerospace, communications, and industrial equipment suppliers, as well as a wide range of web process manufacturers of paper, plastic sheet, film, photosensitive materials, non-wovens, steel, aluminum, other non-ferrous metals, glass, and rubber.

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    Industrial Television -- Video Recording By Gene Bjerke

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    The first meeting with the client is more than a get-acquainted session... The business at hand for you at this meeting is not to find out about the subject, but to find out about the videotape itself. Don't be surprised if the client wants to launch right in to talking about the subject. However, this will do you little good until you know about the tape. So as soon as possible, swing the conversation around to the four P's of the videotape: People, Purpose, Presentation, and Production.

    It is not a good idea to write the narration first then think up ideas to illustrate it. For one thing, this puts the emphasis on the less effective part of the video and reduces the more effective to a second-class status. Secondly, when explaining things in words, we tend to make our explanations more universal by making them more abstract. Thus, you will put yourself in the difficult position of trying to use moving pictures, the most concrete form of expression, to illustrate abstractions. Let the visuals drive the script and keep everything firmly rooted in the concrete.

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    Insitu

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    INTEGRATOR: TECHNOLOGY MAKES THE DIFFERENCE
    3:00 Minute Script

    In the field of small tactical unmanned aircraft systems one company leads the way:
    Insitu.

    For more than five years, the ScanEagle by Insitu has distinguished itself as one of the most capable, cost-effective, and dependable systems available for intelligence, surveillance and reconnaissance.

    Now, with the Integrator, Insitu has created the next generation UAS—combining key strengths of the ScanEagle: Long Endurance, High-Performance, Heavy-fuel propulsion, and Runway Independence (without the risks associated with nets), with technologies enabling a new paradigm in UAS payload capability and operational flexibility.

    Built for both the present and the future, the Integrator’s open software architecture is a force multiplier. Standardized electro-mechanical and payload data interfaces provide for rapid integration and deployment of large single or multiple payloads. With multi-mission capability in a single aircraft, the Integrator can be configured to handle the most complex operations with a single sortie—imaging, intelligence, tracking, communication relay, all independently or in concert. Flexibility that allows the operator to adapt, overcome, and succeed in the most dynamic mission environments.

    With Integrator, technology makes the difference and Insitu leads the way.

    Integrators suite of Insitu payloads is another example of focused technology benefiting the mission. The single turret’s electro optical and dual infrared sensors provide critical imagery, night and day, while adding ranging and visible cueing to forces on the ground. Synthetic Aperture Radar (SAR) enables broad-area searches by imagery analysts, to detect man-made objects obscured to the naked eye. —all can be deployed on the Integrator. Just as critical is the direct support to those who need it most: Cutting-edge communications payloads securely relay tactical information and provide encrypted digital video to a forward unit’s Rover 4 or Rover 5 remote video terminal.

    Insitu has been the class leader in heavy-fuel propulsion, fielding in theatre successfully since early 2008. Integrator carries forward this tradition of excellence and leading from the front with its electronic fuel injected heavy fuel engine. Now in flight trials, this powerplant reduces logistics footprint and costs by use of a common commodity fuel. EFI/HFE also improves reliability and performance by utilizing a controlled and standardized fuel, implementing finer engine control and health monitoring via EFI, and creating an engine that dynamically adapts to its operating environment.

    Cutting-edge technology makes the Integrator by Insitu the most versatile UAS in its class—prepared today for land and maritime expeditions around the globe.

    The Integrator by Insitu—advanced technology to support your mission.

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    Inspire

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    You enrich the lives of others. You spark love, hope and pride. You touch the world around you in many subtle, yet enduring ways. You may not think your life is extraordinary. We do. Inspire is our tribute to the extraordinary strength and spirit of today’s woman. We know. From our 105 years of making women beautiful. This video will cover a wide array of services our company offers. To begin, Inspire’s fragrance line is radiant, with jasmine and jonquil from the south of France.

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    Insulin Pump

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    The world’s first tubing-free insulin pump, the ********insulin pump System is discreet and durable, wireless and incredibly easy to use.

    With just two user-friendly parts that communicate wirelessly, the ********************************* simplifies insulin pump therapy. The waterproof Pod integrates the pumping mechanism, cannula, needle, and insulin reservoir into one wearable unit. The PDM (Personal Diabetes Manager) wirelessly programs insulin delivery, calculates suggested doses, and has a convenient, built-in ***********blood glucose meter.

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    Intense 22 Fitness

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    Intense 22 Fitness offers a highly efficient system of exercise developed from scientific research rather than the latest trends. Our scientifically designed exercise protocol uses computer monitored exercise equipment and a state of the art body composition analysis machine, as well as our own highly advanced online nutritional program and cutting edge nutritional products. You will find everything you need at Intense 22 Fitness to achieve your health and fitness goals. Intense 22 Fitness. A Personal Training Experience.

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    Internal Investor Project

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    Every year, companies around the world spend in excess of thirty billion dollars on market and consumer research. Companies like Nielsen, Kantar, IMS, Gfk, ipsos and Synovate have become global knowledge powerhouses by conducting research into consumer behavior for more than 60 years.

    The thirty billion dollar research industry is driven by the need for information. Information about consumers, how they act, what they like, when they spend, how they shop and why they think the way they do has led to an insatiable need for information. The more data, the more accurate the data, and the more intelligence that can be derived, the more valuable the information. Consumer surveys, mystery shoppers and casual human observation provide brief glimpses into the psyche of the consumer.

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    Jack Morton

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    Now more than ever, companies need to inspire their business-critical audiences. They need to reach out to customers and give their employees a sense of purpose. And sensitive frequent and effective communication is the key.

    At Jack Morton Worldwide, we create experiences that inspire customers and employees. Face-to-face meetings and events. Web and satellite broadcasts. Corporate and retail environments. Experiences that increase understanding, loyalty, performance and results. Our mission is to inspire your business community. We offer our expertise, our global network and our support.

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    Japan’s Stock Market

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    Helped by a $90 billion government stimulus package, the performance of Japan’s stock market has been spectacular in the past 12 months, nailing down a 40% return for investors. Bid Japan sayonara? Not according to Stephen Silverman, head of the Merrill Lynch Pacific Fund, which has scored a 546% total return over the past ten years. That makes it the champ of all mutual funds. Silverman, a former U.S. Marine Corps first lieutenant who commanded a missile battery, keeps about 65% of his assets in Japan, with the rest scattered throughout Asia. He tells Fortune’s Joshua Mendes which Japanese investment targets he has in his sights.

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    Mylan -- Research

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    Research is the life-blood of any company. It is the catalyst by which a company grows, and lack of it can cause stagnation or even failure. Mylan is a research driven company dedicated to excellence. As we continue our evolution into a fully integrated pharmaceutical company, we have targeted compounds to meet unmet needs ... we are aggressively developing products that will effectively treat serious disorders and diseases that are not addressed by pharmaceuticals presently on the market. Our R&D budget is not based on a percentage of sales but on accomplishing goals. We do not waste money, but we spend whatever is necessary to do it right.

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    Napcor

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    One plastic bottle can now become part of all your holiday celebrations. That’s because processes have been developed that make plastic beverage bottles and food containers recyclable into new ones. Until recently, plastic containers have only been recycled into such things as carpet and fiberfill for pillows and ski jackets. But now, a bottle can come back as a bottle, over and over again. And that’s great news for the environment. In 2000, 225 million pounds of plastic were recycled. But much more needs to be done. And more people need to know that...

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    NetJets 24 Hour Worldwide Medical Assistance

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    At NetJets, our care for our Owners means not only flying them halfway around the world in the safest way possible, but also getting them the help they need should a medical emergency arise far from home. That’s why we collaborated with Mayo clinic to develop Mayo Clinic Executive Travel Response. As an owner, you’ll receive a dedicated phone number to reach Mayo Clinic medical professionals 24 hours a day, for any medical reason. Whether you need critical care in Eastern Europe and don’t know where to turn, or just want medical advice from a trusted source closer to home, someone is always there for you.

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    Not So Obvious

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    Here’s the thing. When you want to rent a car, you probably don’t already have a car, or you wouldn’t need one, right? So, how do you get to the car? The answer is obvious. Or is it? (this is the script Edge Studio used for the current Audition Contest.)

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    Operation Hope

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    Operation Hope is the product of the creative energies of thousands of citizens. Representatives from churches, synagogues, businesses, and schools come together to help our neediest neighbors. Operation Hope provides emergency food pantry for families, shelter for homeless families, community kitchens, and supportive services. The services we provide do bring hope to shattered lives, and make real the possibility of recovery, restoration, and stability. Lives are touched. Hope is alive.

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    Parker Company

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    Since the 1950s, Parker Drilling has been an active player in drilling markets. Today, Parker operates around the globe. Parker does not seek out markets solely for their exotic nature. Parker is well suited to move with customers into rugged, hostile drilling environments. In some markets, Parker has little or no competition. In other areas, like Latin America, the Asia Region, and in the United States, there is considerable competition, depending on the specific country or location. We compete against no single drilling contractor in any of our markets, however. This direction toward more industry consolidation is expected to continue, meaning fewer, but larger competitors.

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    PCN Computer Network

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    Physician Computer Network is a leader in the developing and marketing of highly functional practice management software products for physician practices. The company’s objective is to establish a large installed base of physician practice customers who use PCN’s software products. Since September 1993, the company has completed seven acquisitions of software information businesses. These acquisitions have lifted PCN’s share of the office-based physician market to over 85,000 physicians resulting in an approximate 25% market share.

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    Pfizer Corporate Orientation

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    At Pfizer, we want every colleague to feel connected by an inspiring vision of our place in the world and our future together.

    Achievement of the vision begins with clarity. As we continue through this orientation, you will see that we have rare clarity about our mandate as an organization, and the way people within it must pursue results.

    But the words can only be a guide for action. Each of us must feel energized by our purpose and mission, become a champion of our values, and behave as a leader.

    We are a great company, with a record of exceptional performance and success. But we have before us the opportunity to become an enduring leader, contributing more to human health than any company in history. It is up to each of us to find a way to lead.

    Understanding the principles that guide our quest is only the start. Bringing them to life through action is the challenge we face every day. Together, we can meet this challenge.

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    Private Equity Video

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    Welcome and thank you for taking the time to learn a little about private equity.

    In this presentation, you’ll learn the basics about private equity and the role it can play in your clients’ portfolios, as well as in your practice.

    Your ability to address the needs and goals of clients in these important segments will help you attract new business and build your practice

    Clients have goals related to seven life priorities, with Finance being the connecting point among them all. Understanding these life priorities can help you identify concerns clients may have in their pursuit of their goals.

    For instance, a client in Segments 4 through 9 may want to:
    -Invest according to my values.
    -Save for retirement.
    -Enhance returns while lowering risk.
    -Help preserve my original investment.

    For many of these clients, private equity can be an important solution to help them pursue their goals.

    Specifically, we’ll discuss how private equity solutions can:

    -Fit into your overall goals-based approach with clients.
    -Help your clients pursue the goals that matter most to them.
    -Help you attract new assets.

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    Prudential Healthcare

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    Each year Prudential HealthCare conducts member satisfaction surveys to discover which member services and benefits are working well and to identify opportunities for improvement for the Prudential HealthCare HMO and Prudential HealthCare Point of Service plans. In response to your feedback, we have enhanced the provider networks to provide more choices to you. There are now 257 hospitals and 39,990 primary and specialty care providers in the HMO and POS networks in New Jersey, New York, Connecticut, Pennsylvania, and Delaware.
    Pay Coach. Sit in First Class. Fly like a king. Enjoy the royal treatment when you fly First Class for the price of Coach with a ConnectFirst fare on Northwest Airlines. Just purchase a full-fare Coach ticket on a qualifying connecting flight, and you’ll receive an automatic upgrade to First Class. Plus, you’ll receive an additional 1,000 WorldPerks Bonus Miles roundtrip. For your ConnectFirst fare, book online at www.nwa.com, call your travel agent, or call Northwest at 1-800-225-2525.

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    What's your story?

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    What’s a story?

    It’s not just the classic scene of a childhood bedtime ritual, or a circle of children, eyes

    filled with wonder...

    Stories have been apart of us and how we communicate for ages.

    They’re everywhere; about everything.

    They influence who we are...and what we do.

    We tell stories because we want to be heard...remembered.

    They educate, entertain, engage...create a reaction.

    But digital storytelling...it’s brand films; cinematic narratives; product personas; visual

    experiences.

    They captivate our soul; give voice; create an emotional connection; sustain a brand;

    tug at our heart strings; motivate us to do something...anything. Impossible not to share.

    90 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BrianG's recording

    Another audition I did, but haven't been hired for. Please provide feedback on audio quality and "Natural, conversational" feel.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This felt read and a bit insincere, a little too announcery to be considered conversational in my opinion. It's a tough script, no doubt, but I didn't get that you were a representative of the company, but an endorsed actor.

    The lists that are there you just read, and don't seem to connected to on a comprehensive level (not to be mean, just saying that it comes off as read-y) You are TELLING us the difference between regular storytelling and digital storytelling in the new era -which is storytelling on crack, right?! Which is something you should be excited about. You don't sell that part, and that's your sales pitch.

    Peer Feedback:

    If this is an active job not yet awarded, you're possibly violating an agreement about publicizing a script. You should never post here scripts of jobs not yet awarded. You could really damage your chances of getting jobs with this job source and just in general get black listed. Don't post audition scripts. Just don't.

    Peer Feedback:

    The quality sounded good to me. I thought you were really clear and your voice is great, but your voice does sound "announcery"

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks all. Good feedback.

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    Working with EQ and mic position, welcome all comments. Thanks

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    I thought it was a very good read! It was clear, well paced, and the inflection/emphasis sounded natural. The recording quality was clear as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice and read. Very easy to listen to.

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    Put this together in about 15 mintues from existing reads... what do you guys think?

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    Peer Feedback:

    sounds great! not sure if they want the narrative and commercial on the same demo though. sounds like you have a bright future!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Taylor, First let me thank you for your comment about my Action News piece. I really like that one too. Your stuff is great! Good energy in your reads. A little CC (const. crit.) though. A smoother transition between pieces is a little easier on the listener. Otherwise great demo!

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    It's been awhile since I've posted on this site, I've been getting some work. This is my audition for a book "Financial Serial Killers: Inside the World of Wall Street Money Hustlers, Swindlers, and Con Men." The author wants a straight forward, authoritative read. Let me know if this sounds like an authoritative performance. Feedback on the quality of the recording too.

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    Vocal Performance - I like this read. You got my attention quickly, you sounded authoritative. You sounded like a pro. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the kind words.

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    I like it, I think you came across the way I would expect for a project like this. Be sure to keep your energy up throughout and don't let the words drop too much at the end of sentences. Overall I thought it was a solid read.

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    Thanks Romulus..

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the read, and it will captivate the audience. However, the ending was too quick, as it sounded like it was cut off, but the performance alone was great.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the constructive comments and compliments.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read, I can see myself listening to a book you narrated.

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    I'm practicing various vocal styles, trying to stay engaging and keep the energy while not going over the top. Tampax: quiet, intimate material biochem video: just the facts acne treatment: 20-something voice but steering towards conversational Challenger disaster: worrisome documentary Discovery Kids: engaging for big kids Jim Henson Museum tour: warm but staying more conversational Thanks!

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    Tonia great work! I did hear some words get caught in your throat and a few shaky on a couple of reads. On the Acne read, I would start on a higher pitch and try to sound a bit younger since the market is primarily youth oriented. Overall very nicely done and good quality recordings.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Daniel. Too funny with the Acne read, because I was already shooting for that higher pitch. :) I'm glad they mostly worked, though. Appreciate the listen and advice.

    T

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    More practice and recording quality check. I haven't done an Edge weekly contest in a while, so I used recent scripts from those. Thank you for the help with recording quality and noise floors, yesterday. My floor's is at about -78, so that's great. I've also included a couple of claps as Sundance suggested. My take on it is that the shoulders to the right of them are echoes, right?

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    Hi Tonia ! I'm pretty green and have a lot to learn, but I thought the recording quality and performance were both very well done! I had listened to an earlier recording you had made and the sound quality has improved for sure. Just my two cents ( which with my limited experience is probably worth I cent ) :) But Still very good to me .

    Peer Feedback:

    Enjoyed listening, but maybe a tadd more excitement would improve a bit.

    All the best

    Chrissy45

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the way you slowed down the pace a little bit on the more serious read about computers. The other two scripts were lighter and more playful. That came through in each read but could have been a little more obvious.

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    I didn't hear any claps...

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    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-759/City Harvest MP3 FULL MIX 7-5-10.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This is very nice. Your voice is a good fit, and the music works. Pacing good. Emotion and connectivity to your script good, too. I liked it.

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    Please, all comments and suggestions are welcome and appreciated BookMyVoiceOver@comcast.net www.DeniseChristinzio.com

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    Peer Feedback:

    Perfect music for this spot. I really enjoy listening to your voice. The thing that jumps out at me on your read is the way you "hit" some words for emphasis a little too hard and they tend to stand out. I think this prevents a flow to your read. The last sentence, however, had a nice flow to it!!

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    Denise,
    I thought the music, while a good fit, was a little "hot". I think of it as a nice, soft "bed" for the star of the read, your voice. Which is EXCELLENT, by the way. And the read itself was beautiful!
    You're ready for prime time, girl!
    Rusty

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    Please, all comments and suggestions are welcome and appreciated BookMyVoiceOver@comcast.net www.DeniseChristinzio.com

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    Peer Feedback:

    VERY STRONG VOCALS!! I liked this piece... perhaps just a bit rigid in parts... "to-gether, we can meet this challenge..." a little drawn out, and in another spot or two, the same - but I like the total voice quality and inflection/enunciation! Well done!! Technically, the low-end may have been a bit heavy, too.... recordings are tough to master - but the voice... a NATURAL!

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    Great voice !! I have nothing to criticize ..great enunciation,great pace.I really like this one.Good Job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Denise, this was great. but I suggest getting Al to remix it.

    There was something in the music track that sounded almost like a "clicking" LP record. Might have been proper and supposed to be there, part of the orchestration, but I found it distracting.

    Now that I listen again (especially after "together") I think it is just part of the score - still distracting as it sounds like static. Should be easy to find different suitable music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom, I just listened to it again after you peaked my curiosity and yes it is part of the sound track. It reminds me of the Beatles sound track in the song "Come Together" or as Denise Says it's also know as the "Shoop, Shoop" song. That pulsing beat I think right after the lyrics "Come together right now".

    But as always, you have those "Good Ears" on buddy and your critiques are right on the money!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice smooth read, but in places it sounded like you were almost losing your voice. I think that happens to most of us at times!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I hate it when that happens! It's like going to write something important and your pen starts skipping on you. Nice voice, though. Very alive.

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    Peer Feedback:

    First off, your voice is great for voice-overs. But a couple of things to work on. Most obvious is that you accidentall left a technical edit in the copy at the end near "selected securities", gotta' put out perfect work, or have an editor clean it up.
    The first sentence is a run-on sentence that really should have been broken down into three sentences. It's tough to find where the natural pauses in the sentence are, I think you did pretty well, but I can hear you breathing. Takes practice to keep that from showing up.
    Overall though, you're going to be very good at VO, you have a very positive, enticing, crisp sounding voice. Best of luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Steeker: Thank you for your comments. Your observations about this audition was right on the money when I went back to listen after reading your post. My intent is to post an audition or two daily, to sharpen my skills. I am so grateful to Edge to do this and to give us up-and-coming talent a chance to really hone our skills.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed listening to your voice. You have a lovely smooth quality that is nice and natural. The pace of your read was really good too! I think you might want to be careful not to make "want to" into "wanna". This copy seem to me to be more formal that casual.

    Peer Feedback:

    The only issue I heard was the 'wanna' in an otherwise great read. You really have a pleasant voice for this. Right tone, good pace, the whole package. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    A warm, sincere tone without being treacly. Great job! Though I agree about the "wanna".

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    I am a neophyte and need input. Thanks to all! Jim A.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have nice sound. Your pacing seemed a little off to me. And your articulation needs a little work, you sort of miffed the workd 'launched'. Overall a good effort, though.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very good voice.You did race through the first 2 lines,then settled into a better pace.And you mumbled the word launched,it sounded like lost.Thats the great thing about this site,we can practice all that we want to.Keep it up.I think that you have a good future.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think this was a great demo. Clean, professional, good inflections, excellent recording quality. Bravo!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you! I appreciate you taking the time and glad you enjoyed it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Just out of curiosity, why did you omit the last sentence?

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the tone of your voice, you have a nice instrument. Great interpretation too, the effects and music went well with the script. The only criticism...I think, and I am only a novice at this myself...is the "S" sounds seemed to stand out a lot and you sound a bit rushed at the ends of your lines. I hope this helps, I need all the help I can get too!

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    Honestly, I wasn't aware that I missed a part of the script... I guess I missed it when I cut and copied the text! Thanks for mentioning it... I'll be sure to pay better attention.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is nice and crisp.It kind of reminded me of the voice over at the beginning of Escape from New York.I really enjoy your voice.

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    Just starting, new mic and a few ideas. Any and all comments welcome!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! First good for you for posting on this forum if you are a newbie! You will really get some valuable feedback from the folks here. You say this is a new mic, so I wonder if you tested any of your noise level before recording? There is a ton of noise happening...lots of ringing or humming in the background. Also, did you edit the piece at all? If not, do pay attention to your mouth clicks...maybe dry mouth? Drink lots of fluids! You would need to edit those out. Also, slow down and articulate more. Some of the copy was mumbled so I couldn't understand what you were saying. Consider who you are talking to and how you want them to feel about what you are saying. Make it a little more personal. Stick with it! You can only improve!

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    Thank you very much!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Daniel, nice informative read, just a little slow and sluggish. I would like to hear a little emotion and excitement in you voice, (3-Com developed the first technology for networking personal computers!) It's a story of 3Com, read it like a story.

    Peer Feedback:

    Danielle,
    I liked your delivery and your voice, although I do agree a little faster would make it sound better. Also, I'm hearing a lot of breaths in there, even in spots where there isn't a period or comma. Try to stay relaxed and breath naturally. A quicker read might help with that as well, since there won't be so much time between periods/commas.
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice. Pace was a little slow and it could use more emotion and intonation. You also have a low buzz in the background.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Daniel,
    You have a very nice, clear voice! I would pick up the pace though, wishing you the best of luck!

    Blessings,

    Carol

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    I am interested in feedback on the reading, the sound quality and anything else that is relevant. Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice clear sound and a friendly voice, a note I have though would be to add a bit more emotion to it. It kind of sounds like you're just reading off facts, which doesn't really promote the company. Try adding a little more pride behind the words that you're saying. Also I would hit a few key phrases more. Like when you first say the name of the company, you kind of blow right past it and it loses its importance. One thing that I do when I get to something I want to highlight is I do little quotations with my fingers when I read it. Don't know if that will help. If you slow down your pace just a smidge you might also be able to hit those notes. good stuff though, keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording sounds clean and clear on my laptop speakers (I am not in my studio at the moment).
    The thing that I noticed most was the upward inflection at the end of most of your sentences. In a confident, factual read like this you should have a natural downward inflection at the end of each sentence. Just like you did in the first sentence.
    I'll have a listen for the quality when I get back to my studio!
    Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Luc Daigle's recording

    Please provide critique on my performance. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Elgiad007, this is a great read and good interpretation of copy. As for vocal performance, I noticed that you started out strong with 'Nearly twenty years ago" and then your voice softened halfway thru the first line. The softened part sounds more natural, so try to be consistent in the delivery. The other thing I noticed is that Internet sounds like "Innernet" and development sounds as if the "p" drops all together. Practice the softening out the "p" but remember not to pop the "p". I know it's hard to do, but with practice, you'll get it. :)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eppervesce's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you stressed the right sections and it felt like you were a knowledgeable insider who works for them, who's talking about their set up.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Eppervesce. . I heard some sibilance and a bit of over processing in the recording. Performanc-wise your pacing and inflection were quite good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Eppervesce,

    I Agree with ArlenChitty, as I too heard sibilance. One thing that had helped me improve on the same was practicing tongue-twisters containing the letter "s".

    I think you have a very nice and confident sounding voice, which I feel could be apt for corporate AVs & documentaries besides other kinds of projects.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice cadence, and you have a very pleasant voice, but the recording itself sounds like there are some techincal issues with very sharp feedback with every intake of breath and an overall hollow sound.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear FuturityCloud's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Futurity,
    It seems a bit choppy for me... the stop and start of the phrasing made it feel that way.
    Also, I think it could use a bit more pitch variation to make the read more interesting. Speak to one person and have a reason for telling them the copy. Otherwise it sounds like you are reading.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback! In listening to it again, I can understand where your coming from. I truly appreciate it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Were you holding your nose during this read? If not, you really put it forward into your nasal cavity and it sounded a little fake. I think you could slow this down some since it is corporate-type industrial copy and not necessarily a commercial. It needs to be proud and sincere and representative of the company.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Ian Miller's recording

    Part of my search for the best settings for my environment. I'm pretty happy with this untouched recording.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great! Your clear tone of voice was excellent and you sounded like a true documentary narrator. Although you haven't touched your recording to amplify the volume a little for your voice recording seems quite quiet.

    Improvement: To make this passage sound like a commercial, you should try to cut out unnecessary information (like "A few decades ago") and use the present tense. Think of this as a commercial to be read in a fast and snappy way, to engage the audience more with the 3Com company.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well..it is one thing to read the script and another to make unauthorized changes. Were it live I probably would have a discussion with the producer and/or director for sure.I agree with your comments on the volume; sounded fine when I uploaded but not so hot now. Hmm...

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ian,

    Don't feel let down by the volume. You read the passage excellently and sounded like a professional documentary narrator!

    Best,
    Reina

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Reina...been there, done that :-) Ian

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear itsdonsvoice's recording

    1st time I've decided to submit for critique...any feedback is appreciated

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    Peer Feedback:

    The only "ding" I would give your read is the pace - it seemed a little rushed. Overall, the quality of the clip was very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Would have to agree with brian w., re: the pace. But hey who knows, maybe they wanted a 30 second read? Maybe just a bit more animation -You have a Great Voice and I'm certain it can handle a wide range. All the Best!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Brian! I was a bit concerned with the pace and now that someone else pointed it out,I can scale it back about 20 % for vocal magic :)

    Thanks for your input

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Chris!! Sometimes I forget about timing and pace and just read...not always good :)
    I appreciate the kind words and will be happy to comment on anything else you've done! Keep up the good work

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Donald Anderson Solid's recording

    How does this sound? I need to figure out how to eliminate pauses in my voice.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The pauses emanate from nervousness and being uncomfortable behind the mic. Those situations also cause you to speed through without considering what the words mean or the message they convey. Nervousness and speed also cause you to be somewhat inarticulate, slur some words and mash some word couplings together.

    Peer Feedback:

    Note that reading is too fast, it's like you want to quickly finalize the text. I believe it can be a matter of breathing on one side and take greater security to the text.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Terp's recording

    Corporate Narration Practice. Comments welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Solid read, Larry, but the quality of the recording (kind of "bassy" with no "edge" to it) sounds as if you might want to consider using a different mic. As you have such a rich, full voice, you could try using a condenser mic, preferably a shot-gun, to achieve a more focused sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    WOW Larry! Your performance is so good here!! Clear, right pace, smooth all the way... really fantastic!! You have a great voice and I'm sure you are given great advice on the technical side of the read! Loved it! Keep it up! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good tone to your voice. You need a little more high end on your recording sounded a little muddy. You emphasized the second syllable in 'industry' and it sounded a little off.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lee J's recording

    Interested in comments on sound quality and delivery.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Lee J,

    Liked your deliverance, and elocution. A little rushed but non the less a good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a little rushed and a little announcery.

    Recording quality is generally good, but there were either some hard edits or, if you used a noise gate or de-breather, it missed a few - a big one at the comma here "...home office, 3Com systems..." Did you mess with the EQ? it sounds a little "dry" and top heavy on the higher frequencies. Could use just a little "body" of some of the mids and lowers. Also some mouth noise - tongue clicks.

    The wording at the beginning of the script is written differently than what you said. Always good to proof.

    This is an Industrial Narration, so unless you are specifically given a time constraint, take your time. You are the voice of the corporation, so it needs to be friendly and warm and less "clinical" with just facts. Be proud of the accomplishments, but also a little humble. Don't want to get whiplash from patting yourself on the back too much.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott E.'s recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Scott, you read well and inflect properly. What's lacking here is the corporate voice or identity you bring to the script. It's read and read well. However, anyone can do that. Listen to Jerry Lino's read on Carhart Hands. His folksy read ties in with the product he's promoting. While a folksy read wouldn't work here, a corporate tone would. You've heard these commercials on TV, emulate them. Give the read some character.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a thought... If this is a radio spot read i think Rich is right, more character. Im wondering if this was a corporate video, either for a website or a new employee orientation type of thing. If so, then i could see this being a workable rendition. could go either way

    Peer Feedback:

    From a tech perspective...you might want to back off of the gate on your microphone...

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    Practice Recording:

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    Howdy, I have tried to incorporate suggestions of slowing down and enunciating, compressing the audio, and working on not popping my p's.... How did I do? With warm regard to all, SteveO

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think its great! I really like your voice.
    Joe

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sosullivan's recording

    I have no home studio yet, and am a newbie. Please give me any criticisms you might have? Thanks for your consideration!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice deep rich voice, but keep an eye on your levels or use a compressor
    Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Joe, thanks for your feedback! I am using (and getting the hang of) Audacity for OS X, and am frantically looking up info on the compressor. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're using OS X 10.5 or higher (might even ben 10.4) you have Audio Units installed by default. In those is a multiband compressor. It's pretty good. Check for plugins (you'll see VST and AU plugins) and there you'll find apple's set. They're quite good.

    To the read, good voice but the periods felt like commas as you went from one sentence right into the next and didn't inflect the ends of the sentences very much. The pace also felt a little quick. You'll definitely want to invest in a pop screen. Heard a few p-pops there. Watch your diction as you kinda slurred a couple of spots (meaning you didn't clearly pronounce them) which is the opposite of being TOO precise. First I've seen of you, nice job for early effort.

    Peer Feedback:

    The pace is fine. Don't break up your sentences. Don't worry about sound quality at
    this point. I record on an inexpensive USB mike, and it serves me well enough.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SteveFalter's recording

    Revised recording.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a commanding vocal quality that is perfect for this type of corporate read. I this is a good fit for you!! I think you had too many pauses and this prevented your delivery from sounding smooth. This improves with practice!! Even though this is a formal script, I think you could make the read a little more friendly too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, sbburke. I was working way too late last night when I edited the recording. The pauses have been fixed in this revision.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steve - yes you have a great voice for this kind of work - but (imho) the piece felt "flat" - - lacked energy or "importance" - and I felt a bit like you were "reading to me" instead of "owning the words" as it were. One problem may be your enunciation, as it seemed just a bit "lazy". Do you know the "pencil exercise"? If so, use it - I'm sure it will help. If not - contact me (gray@graysvoice.com) and I'll try to describe it for you.
    aloha - gray gleason - voice guy - - http://www.graysvoice.com

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Gray, you're exactly right, and that IS the kind of feedback I need being new to VO. I think I know which exercise you're referring to and I'll follow up with you directly. I think I'm often too casual in my reads and definitely have to work on my enunciation. The word "to" gets me quite often.

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    Click to hear T-Rey's recording

    What I've uploaded here isn't the full 3Com script, it's actually a demo reel I whipped up for a local job that I wanted to get some feedback on (that's starts with the 3Com script). They were looking for someone who could do quick turnaround on corporate style reads. All the scripts I used are from this category listing.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your reads sound good, though your voice sounds over processed. Besides that, it's good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the helpful input! I am taking notes! I am using a SM58 mic and I think that is a little bit of my problem but I definitely need to concentrate on articulation.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Trying to develop that casual corporate sound without getting too stuffy.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your opening was well-presented. I may be wrong, but it seems to me you got more casual as you went along, sort of warmed up. Nothing wrong, but undefined. I hear
    where your going, and expect you'll get it set. At no point did you sound stuffy!

    Peer Feedback:

    To follow up: "Casual Corporate" is a big challenge. Good luck. I have worked hard
    these past few months to avoid stuffiness, the "grandfather" sound. Work, work!

    Peer Feedback:

    To me, you sounded kinda bored. Another thing you tended to do through this read is to ignore most of the commas...just ran right through them. That gives the read a rushed feeling to me. Billboard the brand a little more as well. Business tone is one thing, but it doesn't need to sound impersonal. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't think you sounded bored at all. Well-done one-on-one presentation. My only criticism would be that the music was a little too loud and trailed off for too long. If you had done this spot for a small or even medium sized radio market, it would have played on the air.

    Peer Feedback:

    This script does not sound like a radio or TV spot to me. To me it sounds like a business narrative for investors or stock holders or a trade show. For that purpose, this does sound rather cool in tone...bored and unaffected. That's my opinion and it's based on venue. It does sound rushed because the comma's were pretty well run through. Improve the delivery and this voice could totally work for this script. I know a couple of station managers here (and they book a lot of their own talent for their spots) and I can seriously tell you that they would say the same thing because I've read for them for critique. I'll ask one of them to check out this spot today.

    EDIT: and the results ARE: PD says that the read is too fast and needs work. Also says that it doesn't sound like a radio spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    As far as pacing is concerned, it's important to consider whether this would accompany a video or not. It sure looks like a voice over for a corporate video to me and, so, I'd agree that you need to slow down a bit, with some slightly longer pauses between phrases. This will give viewers needed time to process the visual message.

    You have a great voice for this kind of script and I think the tone is really close. It should be formal, and it is, but not quite so even all the way through. A bit more range in the tone would help. Add a hint of smile...this script is touting some impressive achievements.

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    Thanks for your feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    your voice is very polished i like how you flowed through the whole read
    good job

    couldnt hear anything but you good job on the quality

    Peer Feedback:

    It's not so much the breath sounds that are as bothersome as where you have taken some of your breaths - where they tend to chop up an important phrase and/or thought clump. For instance: It is possible to get that whole first sentence out on one initial intake of breath. I counted three, inclusive of the initial one. Do you really need a breath 4 words into the sentence/presentation?

    Now going into the second sentence is a different matter. You elided into it from the previous sentence, so taking a breath at the comma (after "Today") seems perfectly normal and natural to the way we talk to one another.

    So, aside from the breathing, realize that you are, in essence, the voice of 3-Com - you are their representative. And as such, there has to be a certain pride and gravitas associated with the company - YOU. This a little too mellow (almost timid is spots) for a huge corporation like 3-Com.

    Also realize that there is probably much more to this narrative presentation. So, leave the listener hanging and wanting more. One way to do that is to actually write another sentence or two, continue on, and then edit it off of the audition. The way it is now, it sounds Finalized - The End - Nothing more to see (hear) here!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Twilley2001's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    To me this comes off more as a technical reading reading than someone is espousing the virtues of 3Com. I found myself having to be a very 'active' listener to get the point. Your voice is clear but with a consistent volume and a little more enthusiasm I think you'll be closer to the mark. All the Best.