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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Food & Beverage

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    "Norte Refresher"

    Script:

    "Norte Refresher" Health Soft Drink Spot

    Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For delicious taste with calcium, the only way to go is Norte.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drethefisherman21's recording

    I am using iAudition on my Iphone.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-119958/script-recording-94976.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Try sounding more conversational. Like you're talking to one specific person. It'll make it sound more personal.That being said, I love your energy! Maybe just tone it back a little so it's not so in your face.

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds a little phony, the energy is good but a little over done. Maybe dial it down and be more conversational

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Josiah Bildner's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/7 11.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought I'd seen your name on here before. You posted a few things back in 2012. I don't know if you've gone through any training or not. You have a marketable voice, for sure, but you need to work on delivery. Your tone is quite conversational overall, but you're hitting words that don't seem natural to me. An example of this would be "there's gotta be ONE right NEAR ya." That just really sounded odd. "There's GOTTA be one right NEAR you" is more in line of what I expected to hear. But that's not the only one.

    Like I said....quite a marketable sound. Delivery needs the work. And...given that it's been 2 years...you need to address the audio quality.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom,

    I really dig the specificity of your comments. Very helpful! I am currently looking to upgrade my audio set up any suggestions? I'm getting some isolation material to create a more intimate quality to audio. I would really appreciate any specifics :)

    Peer Feedback:

    If you could give specifics of what you're using now, perhaps we could make some helpful suggestions. Such as your recording space and what gear you're currently using...it's usually best to start there then you will find quite a few have gone through similar experiences.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Josiah
    I agree with Tom on being marketable. Post a few more,play with range a bit. Maybe hit the 7-11 a little harder. When there is so much story to the script you do not want to lose it's subject.

    NGB
    Youthful,easy and casual would be my first impression.

    Peer Feedback:

    I noticed that you didn't post the script. But as I recall " nothin' " (without the G) occurs twice, along with " hangin' " - but why the copy writer didn't go with " cookin' ' or the consistent use of "ya" escapes me.

    Anyway, the point is, besides being written very well and tight, the copy is also written in a deliberate style. So, in this case, you're more obligated to read the words as written and not as you might say them (correctly) in (your) real life.

    That said: I concur that it's a very marketable sound, easy to listen to. Nice attitude. But maybe just a touch roller-coastery in inflection.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree this was easy to listen to. Pleasant and fun. Room noise a bit lively. Maybe a stomach gurgle at 10 seconds? I'd back off a touch on the quirkiness of the very end, but not much. I think your instincts are nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad bro best advice bro just be yourself and don't over think and analize your approach or delivery some of it seemed a bit contrived but your delivery wasn't bad but it was a bit flat try and change up your pitch. originality is key don't over think the specs just play around. Spirituality has been key in my acting career for commercial and audiobooks because i stopped trying to immitate and learned to have fun with my shit ya know...just have fun and add your own flare you never know thats how new genres get created. best way to learn how to act......MEDITATION i shit you not.....keep talking bro and never shut up.

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    7 11

    Script:

    So it’s 2:00 in the morning...and you’re starving. Nothin’ in the fridge, and nothin’ in the cupboards. You don’t even have dog biscuits hangin’ around. You think about cooking, but then you remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove. Well, check out 7-11. There’s gotta be one right near ya’. They have everything from burgers to tacos...24 hours a day...7 days a week. 7-11. Think of it as your own personal walk-in kitchen.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mrwolfe's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114443/script-recording-90374.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good recording quality. Nice vocal texture, maybe smile more on the "up" beats (when touting the convenience of 7-11) to differentiate from the "it's 2:00 in the morning" feeling. Try to talk to one person to give you a more conversational tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is pretty good.

    You're suffering from what my friend TxTom calls the "down, down, down™" syndrome. All of your sentences and partial sentence phrases end in a downward inflection. It's kind of robotic - not the way we normally talk to one another.

    This is a particularly well written piece of copy, so it's important to pay attention to detail. You said "nothing" (both times), when there is no G on the end of the word as it is written. Then there a couple of places where the words get a little slurred or mangled. Examples: "...it's 2:00 in the morning" sounded like "...iss two o'clock ina morning." Not a hint of a D on the end of "around"

    "So" isn't really that important a word to set off so much. It's there - in the same way that most of the rest of the copy is written - to add a more colloquial tone to the copy. IMHO, it's more of a sound interjection than an aqctual word, something to flip out quickly to get to the meat of the sentence's meaning. For instance, how would you say, "So how'd ya like it?" as a quick thought as opposed to, "So. How did you like it?" as two separate sentences? Same meaning, but the first is more informal than the second.

    A director would tell you to tighten it up. You're delivery is at least 9 seconds too long. That's a lot of extra time for you to loose the listener's interest. And in advertising, time is money.

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely too slow and too many long pauses to start off. The end of every line traillls. It can be good to do that in a few spots but it can't be so many times in a row or so many times overall.

    There's a wrestler named HHH who is goofed on by fans because he seems to enduhhhh every other worduhhhh, the same wayuuhhhhh. You don't want to fall into that trap.

    "You think about cooking, but then you remember.........the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove"
    Too long of a pause there.
    That line should be read with different tempo in parts in order to lead us one way and then smack us with the fact that "Hey! You goofed up and almost burned your house down. Yea mayyyybe let's go in another direction this time". There's some sarcasm and some lead in to the next line which is going to be the solution to your problem. But the tempo and tone doesn't seem to change as much as it should. Instead, an overly long pause is used to separate the two halves.

    You have a smooth, cool customer sound to you and I can imagine it going beautifully with lots of scripts. But maybe it's a sound that is a little too laid back for this particular script.

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    7 Up

    Script:

    7 UP
    Script:
    7UP Plus with Calcium. Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For great taste with calcium, the only way to go is UP.

    152 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    I am using an app called Iaudition.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100907/script-recording-78844.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    There's a lot of energy here, and character, and an interesting accent. I like the humor at 'feel it in your bones" and "UP", but maybe the emphasis on those words is a bit too sudden and a bit too different from the rest of the piece. Also some gaps such as between "in" and "every" and maybe a few too many words are emphasized, making the piece a bit sing-song. Overall I feel you should aim for a more level sound, though keeping the energy.

    Peer Feedback:

    I noticed you sarted having fun when you hit the feel it in your bones line at the end and added some character.....do that everytime on the entire thing and stop reading....reading bad.....talking great.....have fun....Meditate...expand your mind bro.

    Peer Feedback:

    take an improv class or 2

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    7 UP

    Script:

    7UP Plus with Calcium. Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For great taste with calcium, the only way to go it UP.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jennthurston's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-18530/script-recording-40897.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Jen,

    I really like your voice...this was a good read...maybe could have been a pit more relaxed...but all-in-all, I think you are close. Nice job :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good to these inexperienced ears!

    Thanks again for your feedback, all the best and God bless!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello
    Great clear voice good energy too, i hear a few strange pauses in your delivery.
    It makes it a bit choppy for example " after a whole new ...........kind", and "the only ....... way to go is up".
    Otherwise I think you are on the right track , practice makes perfect!!!
    Regards
    balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    your voice is perfect for this! I can totally hear this on TV! I thought the fourth and fifth sentence (up to 'calcium') was your best read as it sounded more fluid. Love the smile behind it too!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good positive sounding delivery. I did think that your first sentence...the brand itself, could have been done better. It felt odd in the way you inflected that. You also could smooth out "you can feel in your bones" a little and improve that part. You've got smile in the delivery which is great but the smoothness of the delivery needs practice. Keep at it....'cause I think you've got a nice sounding instrument.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice tone is great, very positive and makes me want to listen to you. Just smooth out your timing, keep the pace a bit steadier.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like your voice, you sound very professional and upbeat. I'm not a pro by all means the line "in every 8 oz. serving" sounds a bit choppy but other than that I really liked it :)

    Peer Feedback:

    not bad i think if you speed that one up a little bit and relax a bit you would nail that one.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad, you sound bubbly enough… But need to work on the choppiness. :-) But overall good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a great voice and everything sounded perfect except the end where you paused on, "the only way to go...is UP." it sounded like you paused a little too long or stumbled on the misspelled is/it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. Professional sounding, mature voice that will take you a long ways. Cheers.
    Tom

    Peer Feedback:

    Delivery wasnt basd but inflections don't match the kind of message being carried I mean to get exited but not too excited don't over think or over act

    Not bad

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your energy is great and matches the copy. I suggest practicing the pacing and timing. And perhaps you might smooth out a few sentences in terms of your pauses and intonation/pitch in some places (for example, "a whole new" and "only way to go"). Your voice sounds really nice. Good luck!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I'm concentrating on getting rid of the echo on this one as far as recording quality is concerned. I heard a couple of pops. Are they as noticeable as I think they are? I heard other things, too, but I'm my own worst critic so that's where your feedback comes in. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/7-11.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Chris! Granted, I'm not listening on the best headphones right now, but I didn't really detect any issues with echo on this one - recording quality sounded pretty good. I didn't pick up on any obvious pops, either. From an editing perspective, there was a loud noise right after "kitchen" in the last sentence... sounded like maybe you brushed up against the mic.

    Overall, I think the read was pretty good, so my comments are really nit-picks.

    Personal opinion, but I would have like to have heard a bit more space between "morning" and "and" in the first sentence. At the very least, there should be a distinct break there... your "morning" glided right into the "and" in your read.

    I think the pacing was a little off (just a little)... a bit slow in some places, and a bit rushed in others. The sentence about the 3-alarm fire sounded like you were rushing to get it out in a single breath. This is likely supposed to be a 30-second spot, and you ran a bit over that.

    I picked up an instance of your "stretched vowel" on the word "stove." :-)

    Have a great day, and keep posting!

    bwvoice

    Peer Feedback:

    I did detect some unintended mic noise, which you can probably correct by placing the mic just above your mouth and don't speak directly into it.
    As far as performance is concerned I think the pacing was slow, your clarity was fine, and I think a stronger attitude towards the copy would help and maybe pick one real friend you want to convey these ideas to should help personalize the spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Chris I heard the scrape at the end. I feel that the read was a tad, almost dragging. You have a smooth voice. just need to pick up the pace and timing

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear cynthiacasby's recording

    Hi guys not really asking for feed back on my performance. I'm trying to fix my sound quality. I've set up my vocal booth in a small closet that I've lined the walls with 2" foam. I also have a new Rode microphone with a focusrite Scarlett interface. Been doing youtube "learning" on how to edit my audio. I'm concerned that my recording space maybe to small and causing a muffled sound. Any advice that you can offer is greatly appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-108748/script-recording-92308.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Did you use any processing on this recording?

    There is a certain "hollowness" to the sound, like you applied some noise reduction that is interfering with the vocal frequencies. But I could be mistaken.

    Is your microphone enclosed in anything or backed into a corner? It kinda needs to "breathe" in open space. So if it's too close to a wall or solid surface )even if it's covered with foam), you'll get that hollow/boxy sound.

    I am not a big proponent of foam, I rather prefer moving blankets or other cloth-like sound absorbing materials. But if you are going to use acoustic foam (like Auralex), the thicker the better. Two inches may not be enough for your particular space. Others may have different opinions on that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey thanks James, I did use processing. I'm attempting to teach myself how to edit and process my audio by watching youtube videos. I will post another audio without any processing to get feedback.

    Wow that's amazing that you can tell that my microphone is close to the wall. The closet is not very wide but longer in length. I do have cheap 2" foam that I purchased from Amazon that's not covering the bottom sections of the walls. I really can't place much thicker foam because it's really a tight space and I can't afford Auralex. I do however have one cheap very thin moving blanket covering the door.

    I have a computer monitor in the space with me, do you think it can interfere with my audio because its a hard surface?

    Thank you so much, I really value your opinion and advice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Having a hard surface such as a monitor in the booth CAN be an issue, so it's important that your sound doesnt reflect off another hard surface to the mic or FROM the monitor to the mic. I use a tablet to read from and it basically reflects back toward my face, but my mic is above and off to the side so it's not really in the path of any reflections. So a little common sense can keep it from being an issue.

    As for foam, I am a user of it because of how I had to set up my space. Blankets are less expensive and can be more effective. But for me, I had to get 4" foam for sound absorption AND anti-reflection. 2" foam just didn't cut it in my small booth.

    Peer Feedback:

    It also depends on the kind of foam you used. If it's really cheap stuff, even though they might claim that it's acoustic foam, it might not be. It's a "you get what you pay for" kind of thing.

    But moving blankets are relatively tried and true. Here's a link to a couple of sources:

    http://www.harborfreight.com/catalogsearch/result?q=moving+blankets

    http://www.uscargocontrol.com/Moving-Supplies/Moving-Blankets-Moving-Pad...

    You might need to double up the thickness, but it won't be nearly a thick as 4" of foam on all of the walls. And it will be more sound absorbent.

    I also have my mic upside down on a boom arm rather than a mic stand. so that it can "float" in space. I found that a stand was too cumbersome and limiting for my space. Just tiny adjustments here and there can improve the sound.

    https://www.amazon.com/s/ref=nb_sb_noss_1?url=search-alias%3Daps&field-k...

    Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom, my monitor is placed higher than my mic so hopefully there isn't any reflection of sound there. I've tried moving my mic away from the wall to a more centered position within my "vocal booth" closet, but there still seems to be this hollow or muffled sound quality. I don't think that I can use 4" thick foam because there's barely any room for me to fit inside now...lol. Maybe the closet is just too small for good audio quality. Tom one question, how do you manage to operate the computer to record when you don't have a monitor or a keyboard inside the booth with you? .

    Thank you so much for the valuable advice :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    James you're correct, I guess I got what I paid for. The foam was less than $100.00 for 48 12 x 12 squares. When I received them in the mail I kinda thought they looked like packing material for boxes. The good news is that I do have 2 moving blankets that I purchased from the local Harbor Freights and I have a boom arm that I purchased from Amazon.com. I don't however have it upside down. Maybe I'll try that to see if it helps. I'm going to remove all of the foam from the walls and replace them with moving blankets. I guess I'll have to take a drive to Harbor Freights for more blankets. :-)

    Hey thank you guys for your advice, it's really difficult for me to bounce ideas off of anyone because I'm the only one that I know whose trying to do VO's. My circle is incredibly small.

    Peer Feedback:

    Go to 6:05 in this video. Even though this mic is in a stand rather than a boom arm, notice the mic placement. It's upside down, above her head and tilted away. That's how I have mine and how they usually position the mic during moat of the audiobook sessions that I attend at the SAG VO Lab in NYC.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Okr7s-uMYjU

    You can attach a pop screen if you need it. It may also help a little with sibilants.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James, I've just made the adjustments to my mic and I will re-do my vocal both with the blankets. Thanks to you and Tom for the great advice. Much appreciated. :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't forget about the floor and the ceiling - carpet for the former and the foam will work on the latter.

    Peer Feedback:

    the way I control the recording is simple...as if I were using tape. Start my recording with the booth closed from another room (!) and let it record the booth sound for about 20 seconds. Then I walk in there, close the doors to the room and the booth and do my read on my nook tablet. I don't worry about starting and stopping the recording. Long gaps are easily erased, I mark errors on the soundwave by snapping my fingers close to the mike and creating a sharp spike on the waveform. When I'm done, I walk back into my office where my computer is and start editing.

    I do have twisted wave that I have tried to love...just don't like it as much as Amadeus...but the little phone app that you can download would allow me to start and stop the recording in the booth...but to me it's not worth the trouble.

    Peer Feedback:

    James I have the cheap foam squares covering the underside of the closet shelf that's above my head (I didn't remove the shelf) and there's pillows and bedding on top of the shelf almost reaching the ceiling. I also have carpet on the floor.

    I'm going to remove the foam squares soon and replace them with moving blankets. I'm not ready to give up the monitor in the closet yet. I kinda figure it should have a similar effect as having a window in a whisper room. They're both hard surfaces (glass). I could be wrong but I'll do a little trial and error.

    Thank you guys for the great advice. ;-)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Crosier's recording

    Life has been a whirlwind over the past couple of years, so I haven't uploaded anything in forever. Thought I would like to get my chops working again. So here's a quick practice recording. Looking forward to your feed back. -Dave

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6103/script-recording-90377.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave,

    Armature here. :-)

    I find the recording quality to be very good....

    On performance, I would suggest more emphasis on the first "So" Soooooo

    You have a great voice, strong, clear and very attractive to listen to.

    Best,

    Joe

    Peer Feedback:

    Coming from "stove" to "Well" I feel like the end of the stove sentence needs to be delivered differently so that it leads more naturally into the shift.

    You raise your pitch for "last time" and for "stove" and I think the way you did that is off.

    Most of the tempo seemed good to me except for the pause before the dog biscuit line.

    The script says " but then you remember the ". It sounded like you said "and then you remember that"

    Peer Feedback:

    Production value is really nice.

    Have to disagree with joetraigle about stretching out "Sooooo". Not an important word, IMHO. What you did is what a director might prefer.

    A couple of little things. "Yer" for "you're" - might get away with it with this copy though. A couple of TH farts/clicks - the first "Nothin'" and "think". A little plosive on "twenty" and "personal".

    I get the feeling that you were trying to time the transition to the music. But if that wasn't a consideration, the delivery could have been just a titch slower. You have at least an extra 3 seconds to fill. So you can possibly draw out the setup just a touch for that sense of, "Nothin' here. Nothin' there. Nothin' anywhere!" Gives me the sense that you're really lookin' around for something to much.

    Good stuff.

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    7-11

    Script:

    So it’s 2:00 in the morning...and you’re starving. Nothin’ in the fridge, and nothin’ in the cupboards. You don’t even have dog biscuits hangin’ around. You think about cooking, but then you remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove. Well, check out 7-11. There’s gotta be one right near ya’. They have everything from burgers to tacos...24 hours a day...7 days a week. 7-11. Think of it as your own personal walk-in kitchen.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear OpusVocus's recording

    This is strictly a practice read. I'm looking for candid feedback on how "conversational" I'm coming across. I had trouble deciding if this was a radio or TV spot, so I tried to walk the line between both approaches as for punch and pacing. Technically, I have some challenges with mouth noise and the noise floor in my recording space, so I'm trying out some Izotope De-Click and De-Noise plug-ins. I'm curious what you think of the results, and of course any other comments or suggestions you may have regarding the overall recording quality. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-119564/script-recording-93622.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The first half of the read was very halting ....got better in the second half, but it still sounds/feels like you're reading a script. You added "o'clock" where it's not in the script...which SHOULD either just have "2 or two" or have "o'clock" written out...but given that this is a contributor-based library, I'm going to assume that the contributor didn't know the difference. But conversationally...don't most people say..."man...it's 2 in the morning!"

    In terms of connection to the script and being conversational...I have to say that you're in need of relaxing the precise-ness of the read a little and vary the tempo a bit.

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, the recording quality is pretty good. The iZotope plugins are great, but don't rely on them as a magic bullet.

    For instance, the de-clicker was more or less created to clean up the pops and clicks when transferring scratchy vinyl recordings to digital. If you look at those wave forms, the spikes are drastic and very short in duration. Mouth noise and such may not get caught because those wave form spikes sometimes are subtler and of longer duration, so the de-clicker may interpret them as part of a word. Conversely, if you set the de-clicker with too drastic a sensitivity, it will snip things like T's, K's, CH's.

    The same kind of thing is true with the de-noiser, used to cut down on analog tape hiss when transferred to digital format. If set too drastically, it acts like a virtual noise gate, eliminating the room tone "warmth" of a VO recording and possibly snipping out some of your natural vocal frequencies.

    Yeah, there are some mouth noise issues, mostly tongue/glottal clicks at the ends of some words and sentences. It's a matter of figuring out how you're producing them and consciously making corrections. More muscle memory than green apples or hydration.

    The performance is what I would call "haulting". There seems to be a little "hitch in your giddyup". I hear the punctuation.

    Don't laugh or chuckle - Think it, but don't do it.

    The last section was a little "actor-y". Would you talk that way to your best friend? In fact, would you say this entire thing this way to your best friend?

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    7-11

    Script:

    So it’s 2:00 in the morning...and you’re starving. Nothin’ in the fridge, and nothin’ in the cupboards. You don’t even have dog biscuits hangin’ around. You think about cooking, but then you remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove. Well, check out 7-11. There’s gotta be one right near ya’. They have everything from burgers to tacos...24 hours a day...7 days a week. 7-11. Think of it as your own personal walk-in kitchen.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear robertoleysyck's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-122733/script-recording-94487.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Interesting take with the techno music. Not quite sure that something as mundane as 7-11 is that "hip". Dunno.

    The read is pretty solid. Maybe some tweaks were and there. Would be interesting to get another take, minus the music.

    Recording quality is good as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback jamesromick! I did this take with my coach and edited and added the music later. We didn't intend to do it to a timed :30, but I figured I would try it out just for the sake of hearing the vo in context. I know that part of it sounds a bit rushed, and I might re-do this. The track is actually from an Indie Rock band called The Postal Service!

    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, this is a really well crafted piece of copy, with many built-in pitfalls.

    Using the -ing in some places, and dropping the G in others; its colloquial nature with "gotta" and "ya"; the story; and the "formula" of the copy writing. And getting it all in at 30 seconds without seeming rushed. Very challenging.

    Again, for my own amazement, I'd like to hear a take of it without the music. Because this copy holds up without any embellishment. It's the "character" that sells it.

    Watch out for when the G's are there and not there. (You left some off, where I've heard others put them on where they are not there.) Take into consideration that the copy writer wrote this very purposefully and honor the words. That may change in the booth during actually cutting this commercial, depending on the direction and the copy writer's approval. But for an audition, honor the words on the page as written.

    Watch that little laugh. There are two schools of thought on that. Some casting people may let it slide. But the ones that I know and audition for in NYC say that laughing and tittering is a big no-no, unless it is specifically asked for in the "stage direction" of the copy. As a disembodied voice, it sounds condescending and/or sounds like you're making fun of the product, whether or not that is your intention. So, from my casting directors, resist doing it.

    On the line, "There’s gotta be one right near ya’." - make it an "Aw, com'on, you know you want it." kind of moment - like there's no excuse in the world why you WOULDN'T want to go. Duh! They have everything!

    Peer Feedback:

    nice.
    that's a keeper. it's needs a pro soundscape behind it.

    great job, cheers!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree that it's a pretty strong read and the recording quality is very good. Didn't care for the music choice re: this copy. However the thing that really stood out to my ears was at: "remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove." where IMO you came too close to slurring the whole line. I realize you we going for the really casual vibe that the copy calls for...but seeing how you brought this in at about 26-27 seconds, you could have slowed just a bit there to allow for a slightly clearer delivery of those words. Otherwise, I thought it was quite good.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TurtleDerby's recording

    Yay or nay? What can I or should I work on?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice.

    One thing to think about is the product. I would submit that it's the entire first sentence, without the break. I would also question inflecting up like a question on "...8 oz. serving,..." Treat it like a list of "Pluses", instead of questioning the ingredients of 7UP.

    The S's are just a touch drawn out. Not sibilant or sharp, but ssssnake-like. Take the first sentence, it sounded like: "SSSSevenUP Plusssss, with Calssssium". I'm exaggerating a bit, but think about tightening those up.

    Overall sound quality is good. Music fits nicely.

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    7up Plus

    Script:

    7UP Plus with Calcium. Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For great taste with calcium, the only way to go is UP.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Raysvoice's recording

    This is AT2020 with Audacity

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120722/script-recording-93224.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nothing wrong with the mic or the software.

    However, you will have to further sound deaden your recording environment for them to work effectively.

    There is quite a bit of ambient room noise. and quite a bit of mouth noise.

    The read is a bit rushed, sounding like you're sprinting to the finish line. Slow down some, and find the "beats" in the copy, and the key words to emphasize.

    For instance: Right off the bat, you need to "billboard" the product. "Introducing" is an important word in advertising - like "New" and "New and Improved" - as well as "whole new" so you've got two important concepts in that very short second sentence.

    Then there's the list of benefits from drinking this stuff. Actually count them off on your fingers. That might be the way you'd describe to a friend, right?

    Then a big smile on the tag. It's not just "one" way to go, it's the "only" way to go. And then there's a play on words - UP - that's why it's capitalized.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good recording quality and clarity of words, however, the speed of delivery was too fast and there was not much inflection or emotion. For example, there should have been more inflection on "UP" at the end. You could have also put more inflection on "10%" and "only 10 calories" as well as some emotion in " tastes so good you can feel it in your bones."

    Peer Feedback:

    It's conversational and genuine sounding, which is good, but I agree there needs to be a bit more emotion. Imagine you are telling your friends about this drink. Something that you're REALLY impressed by and want your friends to try for their own wellbeing.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mackmediaproductions's recording

    How was my read?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10177/script-recording-64144.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Over all it pretty good! I think you rushed the first Calcium a bit,, I would think 7Up would want that to stand out a bit more. Then "daily calcium " sounds like one word. Remember in this spot,,the Calcium is kind of the Star. I'll try and record one today, and see if I can put thougts into reality. But othere than those small comments,, you sounded good, good quality record, nice tempo, nice tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    ok, I tried one real fast,,I'll post it .. lets see if it come across, as the calcium being more of the spot light and what you think of that ... let me know what you think.

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    7up

    Script:

    7up
    7UP Plus with Calcium. Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For great taste with calcium, the only way to go is UP.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    Trying a relatively new genre for me, commercials. Does it work? How should it be done? Thanks for any and all comments. All the best, Scott

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    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty nice, except for the blast-off SSSeven-up on the opening

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Henry, appreciate the feedback.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice tone and smile, Scott. One was pointed out, but another one stood out a bit to me at "it tastes so good" where the "s"s were kinda run together as if you were saying "taste so good" instead of "tastes so". Kinda slurred them together there. The opening S grew a little life of it's own.

    Pace and tone on the mark.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like your voice on this; it seems perfect for this piece. I just felt that your tone was a little bit stiff, and your pacing was just a tad quick. Try to relax a bit and slow down! Other than that, you did a good job here.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Scott not bad for trying something new. You needn't be afraid to enter into this genre. I think you'd do fine. What I see in your read that stands out, leastwise to me, is how you end your sentences. Imagine yourself playing baseball. Every time you advance to another base you slide into it whether you need to or not. That's what I see you doing with the end of your sentences. Hope you can visualize what I mean.
    Ciao

    Peer Feedback:

    I love 7Up. I remember my first 7Up on holiday as a child. I need persuaded to drink it if it contains something normally found in milk. The problem is the word 'calcium' which ends with /um/. Not helpful. The falling tone makes me automatically question whether I want to drink something with it. And calcium is white where 7Up is clear. Maybe you can spin the line so that you give a rising tone to the word?

    And since the idea of putting something usually found in milk into lime pop sounds crazy why not a more edgy tone? Your read sounds really polished and effortless but if I was the client that's not what I'd want. Since you're daring to try a different genre see if you can't get out of your comfort zone further by creating a new character. I'm a rookie and my coach tells me to think like this; In commercial copy clients want actors with personalities. So who are you and who are you talking to?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks to everyone for the constructive comments!

    Will take them in mind and repost in the near future.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Scott
    The only criticism I have is - it's great!
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bill! Wish you were a casting director!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,
    Are you a professional voice over artist? You sound so good. :)
    Am a learner and your recording is very helpful to me.
    Thanks.
    Sowbhagya.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Sowbhagya,

    Thanks for the compliment. I have been doing English language voice-overs professionally in Finland since 2008. Most of the ones that I have done have been corporate narrations.

    I have been training since the beginning of this year with Edge coaches. They have been outstanding! If you are not getting coaching with them I would highly recommend it.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    you have an interesting sound i can picture it on tv or radio

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Evan,

    Thanks for the compliment. Have done lots of radio in the US but not any TV yet.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Your Voice Sounds Great But I Felt It Was a Little Rushed. Keep playing it forward… :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it was nice.. smile and energy levels were felt.

    Peer Feedback:

    You ask how it should be done...don't ask that question just stay true to your instincts.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mackmediaproductions's recording

    Trying out some new processing with adobe audition and how did I do performance wise?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I hear an occasional lisp on some "s" sounds and 'th" sounds.

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    Yeah Thats my downfall!!i Really gotta workon that It's killing me slowly!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this read! Your tempo was varied and I think, matched the script very well. I also thought the tonal differences that came with the emotion later in the first line were great. With the commas in the first sentence, you might want to try, however, ending with an upward inflection more instead of a downward one, and see what that does to the read. I think you can go even slightly bigger with it in that first sentence, so that when you get to the second sentence, the listener feels like they really deserve it. But, I thought your pause was in a good place as well. Good job!

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    8th Continent Soy Milk

    Script:

    You have broken up with carbs, banked points, done shakes for lunch, steaks for breakfast and can't remember ever saying I'll have the dressing on the salad. You deserve a lower carb lipsmacking soymilk. 8th Continent soymilk. Come to a better place.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    tried a different sound for me... what do you all think? Thanks Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/8th continent Soy Milk.L.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Jeff, from the mid-point of your read, I really began to hear the humor. It's such a challenge to get to the humor immediately. However, I think that the humor in "broken up" has to be found right away. Maybe try de-emphasizing "broken" and adding a touch of emphasis on "up" and "carbs" would let us in on the joke sooner. (I'm pretty new to this, so hopefully I'm not suggesting a wrong path.)

    Peer Feedback:

    needs to be more conversational and fluid
    have you identified who you are talking to
    tighten it up far too many holes with dead air

    Peer Feedback:

    hmm...it didn't sound to exciting to me. The energy seemed low and inflections were lacking. The recording also seemed soft. I had all my volumes at max and was having hard time hearing the recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    You do a nice job of playing with a range of emotions. Perhaps try to experiment with different interpretations of the copy and also imagine who you might be talking to. Depending on who you are talking to (e.g., man or woman), you may want to take on a different tone of voice and also volume.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear stevecooch's recording

    Just switched to a rode nt1. WOW

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good read. I think you are headed in the right direction with this particular piece.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is definitely much fuller on this mic, but that kinda made the performance seem a little over the top for me. This just sounded like my local dj doing a spot he had to do, and not a VO person.

    I'm not sure if the dynamics just rounded out your voice and this is the performance you always have been giving, but I felt like your previous stuff was more natural. So maybe dial it down a bit to balance out the great new gear :)

    Peer Feedback:

    For my sensibilities, there's just way too much voice to this. It's also somewhat choppy and sounds like you're "barking" at me. Too "punchy" with all of those hard consonants - B's, K's, D's, ST's and P's.

    Good mic though.

    Peer Feedback:

    The mic sounds great to me, but the read felt a little like shouting to me for a milk commercial. Maybe soften it up a bit? More natural?

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    A Giant Mini Supermarket - Special Interest Story

    Script:

    This may look like the front of a vending machine. In fact, to make a purchase, all you do is dial a code and a robot sales clerk does the rest.

    Instead of just sodas or crackers, this machine offers more than five hundred items - like panty hose, shampoos, lotions, pacifiers, tooth paste, batteries – even dog food. Need to stock up the fridge? No problem. The automatic supermarket stocks all the essentials – eggs, milk, juices, ham, cheese, yogurt, fresh fruit, cake mix, bread, rice, cereal, pasta, a variety of frozen foods, and just about anything else you can think of to complete your shopping list. The automatic store offers almost every luxury you can think of – wine and liquor, cigarettes, even chocolates. About the only thing this store can’t do is carry your grocery bags for you. But the customers don’t seem to mind - and squeezed into just 500 square feet, this curious little shop just may be the convenience store of the future.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear xi545's recording

    I'm new to this, so any constructive criticism and suggestions on how to improve are greatly appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Kind of difficult to critique silence.

    If you included any special characters (*,&,%,$,#,etc.) in the label of your MP3 file, the software Edge uses for the Forum does not recognize the file. Therefore, it won't play.

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    A Giant Mini Supermarket - Special Interest Story

    Script:

    This may look like the front of a vending machine. In fact, to make a purchase, all you do is dial a code and a robot sales clerk does the rest.

    Instead of just sodas or crackers, this machine offers more than five hundred items - like panty hose, shampoos, lotions, pacifiers, tooth paste, batteries – even dog food. Need to stock up the fridge? No problem. The automatic supermarket stocks all the essentials – eggs, milk, juices, ham, cheese, yogurt, fresh fruit, cake mix, bread, rice, cereal, pasta, a variety of frozen foods, and just about anything else you can think of to complete your shopping list. The automatic store offers almost every luxury you can think of – wine and liquor, cigarettes, even chocolates. About the only thing this store can’t do is carry your grocery bags for you. But the customers don’t seem to mind - and squeezed into just 500 square feet, this curious little shop just may be the convenience store of the future.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear xi545's recording

    The first time I posed this, I had a technical difficulty. Anyway, I'm new to making voice overs, and any general feed back would be nice.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113985/script-recording-89223.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording environment is very live - meaning that your voice is bouncing off of a lot of hard surfaces, almost like recording in your tiled bathroom. You also sound very distant from the mic. You will need a sound treated, deadened space in the future and practice good micing technique. But that need not concern you at this point. You should concentrate primarily on script analysis and interpretation.

    So, here's the bad news. You sound like you're reading - there's little personal relationship (or even personality or humor) to the text or the story you're trying to tell me. A lot of that is the downward inflection at the end of many of your phrases and sentences. Even the question didn't sound like a question - more like an exasperated sigh.

    Lists are a b*tch! But there's no need to take a breath after every comma. It's tiring for the listener. And it sounds like you're hyperventilating.

    The pace, for the most part, is a little fast. This VO probably accompanies a video (evident from the first line), so you need to picture in your mind's eye what may be flashing up on the screen as you "list" those things. Sometimes it's helpful to actuallyl, physically, count them off on your fingers.

    There's some mouth noise - mostly lip smacks from completely closing your mouth before your next inhale.

    And you missed the "funny" (the machine carrying the groceries for you) with that downward inflection. It just seemed very matter-of-fact. Again, you're just reading words without realizing their comic intent.

    This is truly a very difficult script to tackle. And kudos to you for attempting it. You may benefit from something shorter and less complicated (all those lists) - maybe in the 30 second or less commercial range. They're still pretty challenging.

    Peer Feedback:

    The tone of your voice if very beautiful. That being said, I found that those lists were probably hard to read. I would watch out for the little bits where you sounded like you hesitated - which tell you were reading the words and take away from the interpretation.

    Need to stock up the fridge - sounded like a questions and lead us to believe you would give us a very excited response, but then the response went back to reading mode. I would advise to sound more excited when doing the "No problem!" And the last line as well.

    I am new myself, so I hope this is helpful feedback.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear amichaelgray@bellsouth.net's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5268/script-recording-25309.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Michael,
    As usual your lovely deep voice stands out in this read.
    As in even the best of reads, there is scope for improvement. Here are some observations with that in mind:
    - You read "you want to make"as "you wanna make"- appropriate change. This makes it sound informal.
    - You could emphasize "deep down juicy goodness", especially "juicy"
    - You could try saying "Mmm-mmm" with a mouthful of food.
    - Your delivery of "delicious" was delicious.
    - "there's" is not clear at "For me, there's only one steak sauce"
    - You delivered "Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count." very well.
    Good delivery overall!
    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jothi, thanks as always for your professional and honest feedback. It was the end of a long day when I recorded this and posted the wrong copy; However your calls were on point.

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    A-1 Steak Sauce

    Script:

    A-1 Steak Sauce
    With steak, you want to make every bite count. That's why we use A-1 Steak Sauce. A-1 brings out all the deep down juicy goodness of every single bite of steak or even hamburger.
    Mmm-mmm, delicious. For me, there's only one steak sauce, A-1. Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    I am using IAudition.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100907/script-recording-78845.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The copy interpretation, was good. The clarity of your voice was good, the pacing was a bit off. Overall a good start.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad. I liked your interpretation of the copy and I can clearly tell you like steak ;) That is an important part of this, as you need to sell me on how my food just isn't right without some A-1 on it.
    Watch where you choose to take a breath. The audible inhale as you moved to "delicious" was enough to bring me out of the copy. Even with better gear, that will still affect your pacing.
    Make sure you keep annunciation on point. There are a lot of words that end in a hard consonant sound in this piece, and you handled them all pretty well. At the end, however, "taste" turned into "tase," and you lost part of that.
    Overall, great start. Hope to hear more.

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    A-1 Steak Sauce

    Script:

    With steak, you want to make every bite count. That's why we use A-1 Steak Sauce. A-1 brings out all the deep down juicy goodness of every single bite of steak or even hamburger.
    Mmm-mmm, delicious. For me, there's only one steak sauce, A-1. Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Tried something different.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/A-1SteakSauce-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You pause just a little too long at the commas, try to make it flow almost seemless, when you got to A-1 brings out......... you sounded much more natural like you were hitting your stride. then slowed down again after mmm.

    Peer Feedback:

    Kill a cow and get me a steak knife now! Love all the personality in this. I could see that meat sizzling on the grill in this ad.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it was a great read but I wish it was a little louder. All in all great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    nice read and nice vocal quality...well suited to this spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    i liked the resonance and tone in your voice its wellsuited for this type of read but i agree just shorten up the pauses and i think you have it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the personality was great. It made me want a steak. The only part that was bit off was the mmm-mmm part. You work on that and it is solid.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Another challenge: endorsing a product I wouldn't eat on a bet! Did it work? Would you buy steak sauce from this man...? ;-) Thanks - Jim

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    Peer Feedback:

    Works for me...you sound great.

    Good choice of background music too...

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice delivery Jim. It works and works well.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear konatarulez16's recording

    This is my first recording that im uploading here and I want as much feedback as I possibly can!! Thank you in advance

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    Peer Feedback:

    I listened to both your recordings and could hear an improvement in both sound quality and the read from this one to your next one. You have an interesting and engaging voice that may, indeed, lend itself really well to animation - but, honestly, I'm new at ALL this, so I'll let the more seasoned pros chime in on that. Your pacing was fine. This recording had a real "compressed" sound to it as if the mp3 file was set to a very low bitrate. Seems better on your next recording, so you may have corrected it. Try to stick to at least 128kbps, but 192 is even better on your mp3 settings. I'm looking forward to hearing more from you. You have a very natural-girl-next-door quality to your voice, which, from everything I've heard, is the trend. Keep 'em coming!

    Peer Feedback:

    konatarulez - you got skills. The read was smooth and well done.
    IMO, your voice sounds like a pre-teen or early teen (whether you really are or not, that's just my impression sight unseen)
    I'm not feeling like your voice and A-1 are a perfect match. I don't think you would be cast for that commercial. Steak, meat, steak sauce... not typically a young person VO.

    But, on the other hand, there are tons of stuff that fit nicely. Toys, games, Learning channel promos, even talking puppies and kittens on pet products commercials. The list goes on and on. Young adult audiobooks. animation. Fill your demo reel with those kind of reads, and you'll book work IMO.

    Tom is spot on with the "Beezid" commercial person point.

    So, my advice - pick a script that is a perfect fit for your sound, and equally important, avoid the ones that aren't. That's how you get paid.

    hope that's helpful,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Have to agree that this isn't a good match for the delivery of a voice sounding like a kid...or the music bed either...seems like I'd be waiting for "and ugh...I had to eat my veg a ta buls too!" Dave's right. Not a good match.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    I have waves and ozone5 pugin,put I do not know how to use them yet.Help

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1427/script-recording-27422.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a really great voice for this, but your recording is extremely echo-y to the point where your voice overshadows itself. I don't know if you're using bad monitoring headphones, or if you're in a room with bad acoustics, or what, but you have to get rid of that nasty echo.

    Peer Feedback:

    you have a good voice for this type of commercial but i agree the echo is a little distracting.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    I have waves and ozone5 pugin,put I do not know how to use them yet.Help

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1427/script-recording-27420.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lonnie,

    The delivery was good, you made the script interesting by the emotion you used. I would pace it up just a bit, not much and in regards to the sound quality; it has somewhat of an echoing like sound, but you're getting familiar with the equipment you're using. I also have sound quality issues, but I will be getting a new microphone in a few days so my recordings should sound better.

    Otherwise, good job! You made me want to get a steak or hamburger and I don't eat red meat! LOL!!! Hope to hear more scripts from you. Best of luck, LCW.

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    A-1 Steak Sauce

    Script:

    A-1 Steak Sauce

    With steak, you want to make every bite count. That's why we use A-1 Steak Sauce. A-1 brings out all the deep down juicy goodness of every single bite of steak or even hamburger. Mmm-mmm, delicious. For me, there's only one steak sauce, A-1. Because A-1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

    96 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mmack237's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97356/script-recording-81665.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This one is interesting :) You had a lot of energy, but pretty well normalized, it didn't blast out my eardrums or anything, but it sounded hollow, like it was recorded on your phone. So I'm not sure if you just have amazing mic skills on your phone, or the processing took something out of it, or your space? I dunno, but, it seems like some factor took away a little from the overall piece, but if it could be tweaked to bring that bit of voice back that was missing it be a winner.

    Cuz I buy the character, that you enjoy it -lost a little energy on "For me, there's only one steak sauce" but I like that you said it all steak-sauce :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I would imagine that you had to compress and limit the s#it out of this. It's was probably recorded too hot to begin with. There's a lot of distortion, even with the processing.

    Don't confuse energy and intensity with volume.

    It's also just a little brisk in the delivery which causes you to slur and/or mispronounce some words.

    Peer Feedback:

    mack---
    this is a read that I can say you really "committed" to it.
    I am way too chicken-s#it to dig in and do that character - and I respect the guys who go for it, and have some chops. nice effort.

    I liked it. Have I heard more pro "comedic-western-character-guy" voices before?...yeah, probably. But this was pretty good, and you stayed in character the entire time.

    regarding the recording, yeah I'm hearing the limiter that James and bean are talking about.

    Check out the limiter plugin at http://www.stillwellaudio.com/plugins/event-horizon/ called "Event Horizon". it is amazingly smooth and old-school. you might really like it for this exact kind of track. And it strictly limits an output level - but it does it so smoothly, you'll only notice the signal getting "thicker", not getting clipped.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Agreeing with Dave, you definitely committed to the character. I am hearing a bit of distortion. You need to determine where in the chain that's happening. Maybe try using the mic's built in pad (if that's available) or coming back some on the mic pre if that's an option...or wherever it might be clipping..

    Thanks Dave for the tip on that limiter... You always have a nicely compressed sound ... I will have to look at that and see if it's compatible with my set up.

    -touzet-

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear timmer55's recording

    my audio is for a 2 person dialogue spot so you will here pauses in between my voice to allow engineer to insert Diner 1 dialogue. I was a radio announcer from 1977 until 1990 and did 100's of commercials. However in the last 21 years technology has surpassed the old days of reel to reel and splicing together tape with a razor blade and at this time I do not have a sound proof studio ( heck all I have is a RODE Mic and an M-Audio box so please do not worry about critiqueing recording quality as it is not the best at this time. Have wanted to do this for many years but LIFE has gotten in the way many times and I know I have a loooonnnng way to go before I am confident enough for an audition but would appreciate feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7002/script-recording-23716.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Tim,
    I thought your vocal performance was great. You have a strong, confident voice and I think you acted out the character quite well. A solid audition!

    Peer Feedback:

    Kristin thanks for the Feedback, I am going to have to work on trying too hard. I have missed out on 21 years of something I truly loved to do. Years ago I won an ADDY for a spot I wrote and produced and I want so much to get back to where I was in my career but feel like the clock is ticking and if I don't "Ramp Up" as quickly as possible this opportunity is gonna pass me by. I have to slow down and get better at copy interpretation and work on my vocals. I love doing character voices and at some point would love to get some one on one coaching when financially able. I will definitely try the exercises you suggested and will be listening to as much VO as time will allow with a full time sales job. Thanks again for your words of encouragement I am very grateful for your feedback and suggestions on improving my performance as a voice actor.

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    Javier, thank you for the feedback, also wishing you the best in your VO career and looking forward to hearing more practice recording from you.

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    Tim, I liked the performance for the most part...you came across as the quick-tempered type nicely...but I DID hear the announcer timbre in your voice. There's another forum member here who was on radio for a number of years and he said it was really hard to re-learn the craft. He's done wonderfully at doing just that, so as good as you sound as an announcer (could hear it in your slate) I am willing to bet that there are some fine reads ahead for you as you refocus on the skills you already have. I like your voice a lot.

    Peer Feedback:

    TxTom, thanks for the feedback, yes it is going to be a bit rough getting the "DJ" outa me, but I bet several coaching sessions and some weekend workshops will be very helpful. Hey does the Tx in front of your name signify a fellow Texan...Looking forward to listening to you and other members and lots of feedback from everyone.

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    Not a native, but "got here as quick as I could" as they say...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tvsellen's recording

    Here's another pass at this one.

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    Peer Feedback:

    this makes seven posts within a 24 hour period. They're not sending out emails like they used to when a new poster registers, but the practice on the forum is to post NO MORE than 2 per day. As James pointed out below, there is a glitch that sometimes pulls your last post or two forward to be contiguous with the new one...but looking at the time stamps on the earlier posts, those were put up late last night...after midnight in NYC. So...if you're not in the eastern time zone, you posted last night. But still, seven in a ROW. That's theoretically 3 yesterday and 4 today...I believe that's how the time stamps are showing.

    What you're doing is flooding the forum. You're also pushing other posters so far down the page, some people are not so willing to scroll past the first few posts. And eventually, they'll get pushed down to "page 2" requiring a second load of posts. Those posts are not usually on the radar anymore.

    It's simple courtesy to limit to 2 posts per 24 hour period. The practice is "post two and review 4" or "post 1 review 2" to encourage activity on the forum. But flooding isn't cool.

    Peer Feedback:

    Was not my intention to flood the posts. I hadn't read that anywhere but I will heed your stern advice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not meant to be stern, dude. Like I said, I don't think Kendra sends "that email" out anymore, but it's been a long-held practice for the courtesy of all on board. Excitement of getting feedback is understandable...just about all of us have been there. I don't mean to dampen your enthusiasm, but there's others seeking the same advice you're trying to get.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi. I have gotten requests to redo my spots incorporating some of the advice given on this forum, so many of the posts are simply trying to polish the old ones and find my way in this new world of voiceover. Yeah, I'm brand new and learning the ropes, didn't mean to step on anyone's toes. You haven't dampened my spirit in the least. No worries, dude.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with TX. Give others a fair go at getting their posts heard and reviewed. Anyway, I like your voice and performance. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Seemingly, the Forum has some limitations of which only very few know about.
    The root of the problem is:

    * It would be great for EdgeStudio to send "that informative e-mail" to everyone who registers, making the being part of this Forum, a positive and enriching experience to all. *

    Unfortunately, what happens is: one registers, works on a script and listens to other posters' work, comments, etc... - long before building up the courage to go ahead and post something! Once that is done... all is left to luck or/and lack on whether there will be comments or not! All comments are meant to help, encourage improvement. Some people are receptive and try again to share if they met their "self-set" and encouraged target/s... and that is fantastic. We should all be able to actually show empathy (not simpathy-there is a difference between those two words).

    And when in the learning curve, one's told the limits.....it is like an abrupt BANG! pressing the breaks! Creating as a result... a far from pleasant experience. Rules need to be told BEFORE not "during" or "after" frustration on the poster's attempts to improve, because of lack of interest, surprisingly, from those who apparently know the rules ;)

    I registered and started posting 2 years ago. I have never received any e-mail on the rules and it would have been very helpful and encouraging too. I am still involved in voice over work and I will listen, read and comment for as much as I can because I love helping people and I am not selective on whom to listen or not to, whom to comment on or not to. There are cases where the comments already made, reflect what I think, hence I don't comment.

    Let's be honest too... the Forum's been often dead! so... "the floods are seasonal too" :P

    Tvsellen, keep it up! Take note of all that's useful and contributes to improvement, dispose of the rest. This will be my last comment of the day, it is 10:37am over here and I have taken enough space for today and tomorrow (wink!) Have a fabulous day!

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL i get the feeling you eat more steak than you drink orange juice.... this one was great, really felt the enthusiasm in your voice, telling me that this is a great tasting sauce to have with my steak.... little slow delivery but otherwise great.... :)

    Peer Feedback:

    A little more speed on the delivery. You sounded more like you were reading than actually talking to a live human being. Your words were clearly enunciated.
    Mike W.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ZekePoiro's recording

    I have made adjustments to my studio and microphone placement using things I learned VOAtlanta. Would like some feedback on audio quality. File was normalized to -3 db, no other treatment.

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    Peer Feedback:

    A little "punchy" You hit the word "every" in nearly the same way EVERY time it occurred. An old acting trick is, when you have a repeated word or phrase, switch it up a bit to add interest. Hitting that word (and some of the others) so hard each time is like continually poking your finger in my chest, it's annoying. Do you talk that way to your best friend?

    Sound quality is good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Zeke the sound quality is great. The read however left me feeling like you were trying to sell me a pair of shoes. Close your eyes and chew that steak as you experience the added flavor added by the sauce. Now tell us about the experience.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would agree with james
    sounds like your selling the wrong thing

    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice for this. Agreed that it sounds a little punchy in places and that you don't get a "feel" or "taste" for a juicy steak. Perhaps enhancing "deep down juicy goodness" to make it more appealing? To make the listener want or imagine a steak.

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound quality is good. I would take time on the read and use emotion to emphasize the great taste the product brings.

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    A1 Steak Sauce

    Script:

    With steak, you want to make every bite count. That's why we use A1 Steak Sauce. A1 brings out all the deep down juicy goodness of every single bite of steak or even hamburger. For me, there's only one steak sauce, A1. Because A1 has all the taste that makes every bite count.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BJPetersen08's recording

    I tend to be very theatrical with my reads. I've been trying to tone it down and find a more conversational tone. I think I'm on the right track. Thoughts?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you're definitely on the right track. Third sentence got very choppy and there's an editing error before "or every hamburger". Have care not to be too quick and easy breezy in the very beginning if doing so will make it harder for the listener to catch up to what you're talking about.

    And being overly theatrical is one of my issues, so I'll leave it at that. But I think you're doing a good job finding the line between too much and too little. Just a matter of practice now.

    Peer Feedback:

    Regarding recording quality your voice came through loud and clear. There was some background sound however and a glitch in there as well.
    Your voice is clear and crisp and has a great presence. When we record an ad our job is to make the people listening want to run out and buy whatever we are talking about. I feel this read did not quite do this. If was a little to much reading and not enough acting. Try reading it a few different ways and see what happens. Thanks for sharing.

    Peer Feedback:

    There's something odd about the processing that I can't quite put my finger on. It's like there's a lot of bass and higher frequencies (the sharp S's), but a hole in the middle. It also sounds a little echo-y.

    There's also a bit of mouth noise here and there, some detectable edits and (as Tonia pointed out) a few odd places where you took a breath that chopped up sentences (thoughts).

    Some things to watch out for - "wanna" (want to), "Fer me" (For me) and possibly "Becuz" (Because), which is borderline ok. This is pretty well written copy, so I suspect that if the copy writer wanted a more colloquial sounding spot, he or she might have written it that way.

    If you do this one again, slow it down just a touch. And get my mouth watering for that steak. You hit all the right words in the third sentence, but it sounded a little "studied" rather than coming from that mouth-watering place. Did you picture and smell the grill, the charcoal, feel the heat of the flame, see and smell the sizzling steak or hamburger, pouring A1 on them, cutting off a hunk of that meat and popping it into your mouth? Did I get your taste buds going?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you everyone for your comments! James, I can't figure it out either. I'm struggling to figure out what to do. Learning the ins and outs of Adobe Audition as I go. is a slow process but its getting better.Your comments have been especially helpful and are pointing me in the right direction. More recordings will follow shortly. Hopefully I can make the proper corrections. Again, thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear John Wang's recording

    My mic recently broke and I purchased a new mic: NT-USB Rode microphone. I find people online all saying good things about this mic but it sounds bad to me. I am deciding to exchange this mic with the Blue Yeti Pro but I'm not sure if this is just because I am biased toward my old mic sound because I had it for so long or if the quality is actually not good. I am hoping to get a second opinion. Any assistance would be much appreciated! Thanks in advance, John

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    Peer Feedback:

    John, I think your interpretation of the copy was very good. Your voice is pleasant and it works well with this copy. The recording was clear. Good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Had to play some of your past posts to get a comparison.

    Yeah, I'm with you. I don't think this mic is a good fit for you. Without any processing (which I'm assuming is the case here), it sounds kind of tinny, like AM radio. There's no "body" to your voice.

    Don't know much about the Blue Yeti Pro, except that it's big and clunky and a popular podcasting mic. Might be fine for VO.

    Why are you going strictly USB? Why not an inexpensive quality condenser mic and good preamp for a few extra bucks? You might be happier with that arrangement.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you both for your insights!

    Oh thank god, I was starting to think it might had been something to do with my headphones. My old mic was the Blue Yeti (not pro). I do my recording using my MacBook pro but I also use it for a lot of other tasks so I always have to hook it up each time I want to record and take it down once I am done. so, I prefer the simplicity of being able to just plug and go even if I have to spend a bit more for a better quality USB mic to get the same quality.

    Thanks again!
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    If your space is really dead, the Yeti Pro could work for you, but it picks up EVERYTHING, so it needs a well treated space.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi John -
    this mic is way to thin sounding for your high energy stuff. did you EQ the low end out of it?
    Yeti is a nice mic. I used one for years, and enjoyed it. go for it.

    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi John,

    I agree with the comments shared. Your voice does sound 'tinny' and there's that hiss noise heard through the spoken parts. It sounds like noise reduction or perhaps a gate was applied which leads me to think there was some compensation being done to address a noisy or reflective recording space. The Blue Yeti is a pretty good mic - I have one and use it from time to time for auditions, but I prefer my condenser-to-audio interface chain. Since you're now familiar with RODE check out the NT1-A.

    Kind regards,
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you everyone for the great advice. I have now returned the Rode NT-USB and got the Blue Yeti Pro. The difference was huge in a great way.

    Thanks again everyone!
    Cheers,
    John

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lisabeanvo.com's recording

    Hey all, (third times the charm to get this to upload?!) Looking for performance notes, sorry about the noisy recording. I fear I have some line noise I can't seem to get rid of, but am looking for performance notes as I progress. It's been awhile and I'm feening! lol Thanks all!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, another 'great but...' does "look on the bright side" seem SLIGHTLY rushed? Maybe I'm hearing things, other than that - I give you a standing ovation; my dog crapped on the floor, I'm still trying to figure out what A-42(C+D)=530 has to do with my lease agreement, and this is the second time I got Vogue vs Muscle Bikes in the mail! Where's my Amstel Light!?

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, thank you ChasA! Yes, a bit rushed, because I didn't feel it was that necessary and I thought it made it more colloquial. If I were to change some things, I def would not crack soooo much on algebra, and I'd hit "nothing" harder, instead of "says" but I was pretty pleased with it :) At least for audition level... if it weren't for the noise!

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality, while not necessarily something you wanted critique on in particular, was actually pretty decent through my headphones. I'm afraid I wouldn't be the end-all-be-all on home studios, but as a casual listener, it wasn't bad.

    I like the choices you made in voice inflection, particularly on the part about algebra. (Kinda true in reality, though, isn't it?) I also liked the way you wrapped it up at the end with the emphasis on Amstel Light. I actually feel like the first time the product name popped up could have used a bit more coloring, too - seemed a little plain the way it was said the first time, and as the first time (presumably) the listeners are hearing what this wonderful new product is, it should probably stand out a bit more, particularly with a wide smile. A smile of some degree would help the whole thing sound more personal and friendly, too, not as much near the beginning (where you're mentioning how weird the world can be sometimes), but definitely from "Well, look on the bright side" onward. I think I can hear a bit of a smile in "Who says nothing's perfect? - Amstel Light", but I believe that smile could extend to earlier on as well.

    You have a nice, kind of down-to-earth and motherly voice that would seem to benefit commercials like this. Practice hard, and don't give up on your dreams!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great direction! Thank you, and for letting me know about the noise not being so bad. Imma keep practicing!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bnstone's recording

    May be a little different for a sales pitch, all feedback welcome. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, nice job. I liked the music bed, and didn't find it intrusive.

    I think I would vary the pitch more between the "You don't..." sentence and the "Who says..." one. Might be just my ear, but they sounded a little repetitive to me.

    And I'm not going to swear on it, but I believe "Amstel" has more of a vowel sound in the second syllable, where you're pronouncing it more like "Amst'l".

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds like there was either too much treble boost or there was too much noise in the recording before you removed it and it cut off parts of your voice along with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys, I appreciate you taking time to listen and comment. PS I will try to get more separation in the phrases I think you are right about it sounding similar. As far as the treble boost I didn't use any kind of processing for that but you may be right on the noise removal. I don't really have any room treatment so I may be removing more than I think when I remove the noise. Thanks again.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,
    I really liked the performance. I couldn't put my finger on what was causing the issues in the recording but your mention of noise reduction tipped me off some. I felt the track was a bit bass heavy and lacking in top end (probably due to the noise reduction processing). Again, really nice interpretation.

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    Amstel Light

    Script:

    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy.Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    I know the sound quality isn't great, so please just comment on my performance. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you have a nice voice with a lot of energy in the delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Who are you talking to? It sounds like a guy reading. And you sound angry at the product. Or at the person you may be talking to. I wouldn't buy this stuff, even if it does only have 95 calories.

    OK. That might have been a bit harsh. Here's some positive suggestion. Treat list (the magazines, dogs and algebra) for what it is - a joke. It's like throwing a punch. If you telegraph it, I'm gonna duck. Toss it off a bit more quickly - like everybody should already know this stuff. "It only makes sense, right?" Then comes the new information (and slow that down a touch) - "This product brings some stability to your life - with benefits!" And you're extremely happy about that and want your listener to be happy as well. If it makes me happy, I want to buy it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with James on the performance eval. Energy is present, but the audience isn't being addressed...just being read to. He makes great suggestions.

    Peer Feedback:

    copy interpretation: more conversational, and more fluid, connect the thoughts
    vocal performance: over enunciating, spitting consonants like your T's

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    Amstel Light

    Script:

    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy. Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jdogg's recording

    Looking for feedback on my overall audio quality. I use Audacity with my Mac, but my waveform is very small so I have to amplify everything for adequate volume. I hope it's not affecting the overall sound quality. I've tried increasing gain and other suggestions, but there must be a setting off that I can't figure out. Thanks for your feedback!

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    Hey! Your quality is amazing, something to give me an idea on what I should aim for. It is crisp, completely quiet in the back ground and brings out your voice perfectly while keeping it natural.

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    Thank you, youngvoicer!

    Peer Feedback:

    It started off a little stiff, but you seemed to come into your own as the read progressed. Once you got past "AMSTEL LIGHT," there was a lot more personality in the read, which really shone with the "Who says nothing's perfect?" line (which I'm guessing you said through a smiling face ;)).

    Your diction is clear and your voice seems natural (especially at the end), which, at least for me, is always a good thing. Your recording had no room tone that I could detect, which is also a good thing; the last thing we want is background noise or voice reflections from walls.

    One tip: If you're using an audio editor like Audacity or Audition, you might want to normalize the track. It brings up the track's volume to the loudest point possible that won't cause distortion. This means that your voice will be stronger, more present, and much easier for someone sifting through submissions to hear clearly.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much, reteo! I totally agree about the 2nd half being better. I was hoping I was the only one that would notice, ha! I will look for a YouTube tutorial on the "normalize" effect :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you sounded authentic and warm. The other details, well, they are what the professionals know about and I'm new at it, but I think you have a great voice. Maybe a little extra attention to the brand.

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    Thank you Ideire!

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    Words like "Hey" and "Well" are toss-aways. Their only real importance is that they set up a colloquial and relaxed narrative. There are more important words to spend your time on in this piece of copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks and good point, James!

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    Amstel Light

    Script:

    Hey ... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume, dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy. Well, look on the bright side, at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT. It has only 95 calories, but you still get real imported taste. You don’t give up a thing. Who says nothing’s perfect?... Amstel Light.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    OK... FIRST CRACK AT COMMERCIAL READING... AND... Please excuse the noise in the background... Kids are having a loud sleepover and my studio is NOT soundproofed yet... Would like performance feedback please.. Thanks Jeff

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    Peer Feedback:

    ramjamz, here! for a first read not bad at all, just keep plugging away at making the script you! and you will get there.

    ramjamz

    Peer Feedback:

    try and personalize it more...pick a specific person your talking to to help make it more conversational...you can almost never be too conversational unless of course it's that rare moment when they want an announcer(y) read.
    pacing was fine, use inflection to highlight the product name more

    Peer Feedback:

    I really didn't see much that was unique about this. It sounded like you were just reading with little personality and little inflection.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Lonnie,
    First off, let me say that you have an incredible voice.
    I think your copy interpretation is good.
    That your pacing and emotion are good, but that there are spots through out the commercial that did not seem to be pronounced clearly enough. The first two that I noticed were dogs would walk, and the word algebra, but I think there were others also.
    I think you may also have emphasized "still" in "still get real imported taste" just a little too much, although it would need some emphasizing. But I like the feel of the commercial overall.
    Re: the recording, there is noise that is heard in the back ground.
    It is REALLY important to get that as quiet as possible.
    It sounds like maybe it is just room noise that you are picking up with your microphone, but it is super important to get that addressed if you are hoping to enter into the v-o business with your current set up. There are people out there who can help you set up at home professionally, on a low budget. (My set up is in the closet with plenty of padding on the walls, etc.
    Again, I want to close by saying that you have an incredible voice, and I see that you have some interpretation and delivery skills that I myself am striving for. Your work seems close to being "there", so I encourage you to work to iron out these rough spots, and to keep trudging along the Voice Over road!
    Blessings,
    Jenn Thurston

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank's Jenn
    Every thing you said is right,I'll do my best to do better.Thanks again,and God bless

    Peer Feedback:

    Very distinct voice, I can definitely see you doing more easy going commercials like this. You brought a very mellow feel to the table and your tone kept your delivery warm.

    Peer Feedback:

    Gotta deep voice. Also got a lot of vocal oddities. Voice is over processed. Slight lisp in a couple of spots.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very smooth, very deep, great personality. I liked it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    I just did this clip,and some call for redo.OK here we go.Thanks.God Bless

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't hear a problem with the recording. I really like the performance; I can hear you smiling. You did add a couple of words not in the copy ("you don't have to give up a thing"), and I thought the pause after "Well" might be just a tad long. Anyway, I'm gonna go get me an Amstel Light.

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    Thanks Underwood
    That's my first time,I've gotten some nice.Thank's for the push.God Bless

    Peer Feedback:

    Lonnie,

    You have a huge voice, no question about that. Curious as to where you are from? Your accent could be a help and a hindrance. For clients looking for a unique read, you might be just the ticket...however for your basic North American read, your accent may put you out of the running...it kind of depends on what you want to do with your VO career and where you will be marketing yourself.

    From a tech perspective, I heard a couple of places that sounded like the mic was over-driven. Try getting back just a little further...that might help. As I told someone else...keep adjusting your mic placement until you find your sweet spot.

    Best wishes and blessings

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    Amstel Light

    Script:

    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy.Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shiningstar_cs's recording

    I have adjusted the settings on this recording as previous feedback stated the recording was too quiet and had a hiss. The hiss is gone, but there is a slight echo now, which I have so far been unable to remove. I also am aware that I don't have the "Well" in the beginning of the second sentence. I thought the recording sounded better without it.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The recording still sounds heavy on the left channel. The general overall level is higher, but that also brings up the background hiss noise level - it's most definitely still there. After a few more listens, it kind of sounds like either a slightly applied noise gate or noise reduction because the hiss actually sounds a little like ocean waves - softer in the places between words, and rolling in and out just before and after. Whatever processing you used also created some sonic artifacts on your breath sounds - especially prevalent before "You don't give up a thing." More fine tuning seems to be in order.

    It would be interesting to know what kind of recording environment you're working in, what mic and interface you are using, and what software and FX processing chain you're applying. Mac or PC? Are you using a good quality pair of studio headphones to listen with when you proof and edit?

    A word of caution: Unless you are given permission or leeway to do so by the director and/or the copy writer, do not change the script. Honor the words. As the talent, there are choices you are allowed to and are able to make, as to interpretation and intention and inflections for instance. But deciding what words to eliminate (or add) because you think it sounds better - that's a big no, no.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm missing the snark. It's a snarky piece of copy but you're pretty polite about it. I think that's where leaving in the "well" would be good for the copy :)

    You're all on the left of my speakers too.

    Peer Feedback:

    I am guessing you're on a Mac and using GarageBand as your recording software. Right or wrong?

    Peer Feedback:

    I had taken out the "well" after careful consideration of another commenters note from when I posted this previously. I'm getting mixed messages on using my own intuition and perfectly copying the script's grammar. My plan was for any real job to go with what they wrote and only deviate after asking permission first.

    For my software, I just got Adobe Audition. This was originally recorded in Audacity. I uploaded it into Audition to get rid of the hiss as I would like to primarily focus on learning this software. My primary goal with this copy was to get rid of the terrible hiss and correct the vocal level as those who commented last time informed me that my recording was much too quiet. For hardware, I am using a Mac.

    As for my equipment, I have a Samson C01 USB Condenser Microphone with a Pop Filter, and a stand mounted acoustic enclosure. I now have a Sp01 Spider Shockmount, but this arrived after I had recorded this piece.

    Peer Feedback:

    So, I think I may have confused you on my previous comment about "tossing away" the interjections "Hey" and "Well". I did not mean to toss them out, just not to punch the words. They are important words in as far as the copy writer used them for the purpose of a more colloquial, friendly delivery, but they are not important enough to "hit". It's like the way kids now-a-days use the word "like" every other word in a sentence. They, like, "tap" it but, like, they don't, like, "hit" it. It's more of a sound than a word.

    As for your setup. For the most part, software is fundamentally the same. It only interprets the 1's and 0's coming in from the mic/interface. It's a matter of the bells and whistles, the learning curve and the user-friendliness - whatever you are comfortable using.

    I started with a Samson C01 USB mic and still have it. It's a good podcasting mic and could be very serviceable for VO as long as you're working in a relatively dead recording environment. If by an "acoustic enclosure" you mean one of those "mud flap" thingies or a box with foam in it like a port-a-booth that surrounds the microphone, that will help. But it still won't eliminate the ambient sound from the room behind you. That's where you're getting the echo and maybe some of the hiss. The hiss could also be "line noise" - a dirty signal coming from the mic into the computer.

    Peer Feedback:

    I feel rather silly now. I did indeed take the "toss away" literally. I completely agree that I hit that "well" way too hard. I appreciate your suggestions and patience.

    Thank you for providing more suggestions, especially on the possible origins of the echo and hiss. The acoustic enclosure I mentioned is a ARF-32 Portable Vocal Booth and Ambient Reflection Filter (as named by the box). Currently, I'm not in a position to be able to sound proof the room I am in, so I went with this to minimize as much ambient noise as I can.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're probably very aware of the channel issue. Consider using a mono channel for recordings, it may make things simpler. I'd also suggest using Audacity for recordings. It's very solid, free software that I've come to rely on. There are vastly superior alternatives, but none for the low, low price of free. Audacity is also compatible with VST plugins, which you may want to look into later if you want to add flavor to a recording.

    That hiss sounds like a hardware issue, rather than room ambiance. Consider turning your gain down slightly for the recording, then amplifying your voice in post. Lower the volume wherever you aren't speaking. If you are using a USB mic, consider using a computer that isn't connected to a mains source, i.e. battery power. Also, unplug any non-essential devices from the USB ports. This includes charging cables for your phone. If that hiss remains, you will need to get a different mic. You can get a very solid XLR setup for around $200.

    If you are using XLR with a mixer, turn your gain down but your level up. This might help compensate. Additionally, consider both reducing and boosting your bass. Find what sounds better. While I do not hear the deadly 60hz hum, make sure your equipment is grounded. Ungrounded electrical sources can be bad for your equipment.

    As for your voice, I'd suggest trying to "flow" between words. Read the script as though you are talking to a friend. Use that draft cut to find where you can shape up the recording, then run it again. (Be sure to have some warm/room temperature water.)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your comments VideoJames. I'm definitely going to make sure I follow all of the suggestions I can when I re-record this.

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    Arby's Ultimate Angus Philly

    Script:

    Introducing Arby’s new ultimate angus philly. Thinly sliced, premium angus beef, oven roasted and piled high. With hot melted swiss, it could be the best philly outside Philly.

    Arbys. It’s good mood food.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VoiceDude's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    The quality of your voice is nice. The accent lends itself to not quite getting some of the words in the script. Perhaps practice reads and recording them before submitting the final read may help control the words to bring more clarity. Your recording quality was clear. The copy interpretation would be more believable by bringing more enthusiasm to the product. More smiles as you read and more inflection on some of the keys words that describe. I like where you started with this. You are headed to make this a good script.

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    Arnold's Bread Man

    Script:

    Arnold's Breads

    Let me tell you about the Arnold bread man ... lots of years ago, when I was just a little kid, he’d make deliveries to our house every day, just like the milkman and the iceman. I remember to this day, those special tiny loaves he carried and the big smile on his face when he gave me one. Now, I know the Arnold bread man doesn’t deliver anymore, but every day I can still see a variety of ARNOLD’S BREADS on the grocer’s shelves -- so I know he’s still around.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    Checking on studio quality and striving for naturalness...what do you think? Thanks...

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    Peer Feedback:

    You show sincerity in the way you read this. A couple of points: Your pronunciation of "lots of years ago" was a little slurred and it sounded like you might be very close to the mic. Your pacing was good and kept my interest. You had good variety in your pitch and tone. Keep up the good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the friendly quality of the read and the playfulness that you conveyed. A nice laid back music track would have added to the tone. I agree with diamondr67 that the mic may be too close. Great read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello.

    You have a very nostalgic voice. The only thing is that the pacing of your speech is a little slow and I can hear your breaths between words. But otherwise your emotions really come through in your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nostalgic is an original tag for certain. I recorded that a while ago and have hopefully improved. Thanks so much for your comments. I want to know to grow.

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    Aspen Soft Drink

    Script:

    Aspen Soft Drink

    Come with me and discover an icy new world of refreshment. New Aspen is here! Chillingly crisp and clear. Aspen -- different from any soft drink ever. Only Aspen has a snap -- a tantalizing snap of apple. Mmmmm -- Aspen’s different from lemon or lime. It’s an icy world of refreshment. Discover ASPEN -- the first soft drink with just a snap of apple.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    Would like to know how my pacing is and if the sound is suitable. If I need to work on something specific, please let me know. Thanks so much...

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm new but there is no break between "crisp and clear" and then "Aspen", I'm going by the period and not a comma. Next sentence, there is a break after "only Aspen". If going by sentences, the breaks and reading doesn't match. Maybe this helped.

    Peer Feedback:

    The vocals (sound quality) sounded a bit too close to your mic.

    The performance didn't feel natural to me. Your up inflections had me thinking you were either insincere or over-acting. Just didn't feel like you were talking to me about Aspen... relax a little...don't push the read so hard. Let it come naturally and conversationally.

    Voice is interesting, I'd like to hear it tell me about a drink I want and not announce to me so much.

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    Atkin's Advantage Bars

    Script:

    It’s simple, really. You eat an Atkin’s Advantage bar and it tastes delicious. So you have one for lunch or a snack, and you stay satisfied. You stay satisfied, and you stay low carb. You stay low carb, and you lose weight. See, simple. Atkin’s Advantage Bars. A satisfying snack on the go.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuBose's recording

    I don't have a home studio yet, so please forgive the sound quality. I am looking for genuineness...does it sound like I am talking to one person or many? Does it sound like I am happy that I have consumed this diet bar? Are there too many tonal changes? Too much head noise?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great job, Amy -

    Your voice is natural and upbeat. You have effectively used emotion and inflection to deliver the message of the copy.

    Upon having access to a home studio, you should be better able to address the recording quality- (which you already know...) as well as sibilance and pacing.

    Good luck!

    Sara Sounds

    Peer Feedback:

    You do have a natural upbeat tone. There are genuine moments in the read, however, it felt rushed between thoughts. I think I get what you were going for, but try a slight break in between sentences and you should see a big difference. Doesn't have to be much, just slight. Overall great job.

    Throw some blankets up on the wall and that sound will improve!

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    Atkin's Advantage Bars

    Script:

    It’s simple, really. You eat an Atkin’s Advantage bar and it tastes delicious. So you have one for lunch or a snack, and you stay satisfied. You stay satisfied, and you stay low carb. You stay low carb, and you lose weight. See, simple. Atkin’s Advantage Bars. A satisfying snack on the go.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I'm sure I am still far too "radio-guy"- I don't mind you telling me that. How's the pacing? Sound? Still dialing in my new gear, I'm not super jazzed about the sound yet. What do you guys think?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm listening on a laptop without headphones, but I would say that you're backing off the radio timbre a bit here...you have a marketable sound and balancing announcery against conversational might be a battle for you. It's ingrained in so many former on-air guys I understand how it's something to un-learn. What's funny is hearing those who have never been on the air trying to learn the sound. Once they learn they don't need to, they can then move on to being conversational.

    The main thing I'd suggest on this one is pace. You cut this one in 18s where 15s would clearly be too fast and 20s is an odd time. This has to be a 30s spot...so a much more relaxed delivery really seems to be called for.

    Peer Feedback:

    This felt way too announcer to me. I like the voice but I couldn't feel a connection to the voice. I would of liked a more warmer tone.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're hitting all the right marks. The information is all there. What is missing is the connection to another (one) human being. Who are you picturing as you tell this story? Are you gesturing with your hands? For instance: The list: "You do THIS, you get THAT. You get THAT, you get THIS other thing. You get THIS other thing, THIS good thing will happen." Did you tick them off on your fingers? Did you do that juggling right hand, left hand thing? Did you point to your imaginary friend on "See, simple" to drive the point home? Or shrug your shoulders and/or wrinkle your nose and/or wave it off (like saying, "It's no big deal.")? Did you physically gesture handing an Atkin's Bar to your imaginary friend?

    Adding physicality will often take you into a realm of the "real" and get you away from the artificial loneliness of just saying words into a cold microphone. (How's that for existential thought?) Remember, it's not about the voice (although yours is clear, bright and articulate), it's in the "acting" of the thing.

    I will also add a little bit to TxTom's point. I agree that this is probably a 30 second spot (either for radio or TV), but this bit of copy may not be the only piece of the puzzle. There are probably music and visuals (if it's TV) and/or another piece of copy for someone(s) else (an introduction, tag, disclaimer or other dialogue if it's radio), so trying to drag this out to 30 seconds would probably amount to a deadly slow delivery. Shoot for something comfortable, "conversational" and "real". The session director or engineer will guide you as to time constraints.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto James. Your tone, timbre and diction are on point, pacing I felt was good (not rushing through the copy). What was missing was bringing the copy to life with movement.

    Peer Feedback:

    speaking to James' point about video pausing being part of the spot...not TOO much in looking at the script...but some. The voice doesn't necessarily start right at the beginning and of course there can be a few seconds left over at the end to allow for logo or even another announcer to take the rest home. So, as James said, there IS some leeway in figuring an exact time for this script to fit.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear amichaelgray@bellsouth.net's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read, interpretation, pacing and voice quality are outstanding.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Ted, much appreciated.

    Peer Feedback:

    wow. Nice pipes. I really liked the crispiness and richness of your voice. the lines about "crisp salads" and "savory sandwiches" were spot on. Really nicely done.

    I thought the pacing was good. it seemed like a couple pronunciations struck me as a little odd..."hot breakfast sandwiches" had a small hitch in it...

    nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Df, appreciate your time and comments.

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    Atlanta Bread Company

    Script:

    Alanta Bread Company
    When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think “bread.” Think of an entire breakfast menu - fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Café with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company - more than just bread.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    I am using an app, call IAudition.

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    Peer Feedback:

    As far as performance, which you requested, I believe an emphasis on cater rather than can "We can cater" would bring attention to the available catering service. The piece seemed a little breathy, but you didn't ask about editing.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    I am using an app, called IAudition.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100907/script-recording-78942.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job savoring and elongating words; it was making me a little hungry! Your voice was a bit loud so you may want to turn the gain down a little. Remember, it's a cafe. I think your speech should reflect that, thus, the volume would be lower. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    There doesn't seem to be any sound dampening in our recording area. Try haning a couple of blankets around your area. Your voice sounds okay, but hard to tell with the echo.

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    Atlanta Bread Company

    Script:

    When you think of Atlanta Bread Company, don’t just think “bread.” Think of an entire breakfast menu - fresh-baked pastries, hot breakfast sandwiches and specialty coffees. Think of our Café with savory sandwiches, daily soups and crisp salads. And don’t forget…we can cater your next special event or meeting! Atlanta Bread Company - more than just bread.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gheilweil66's recording

    Do i capture the spirit of the read here? What specifically could I improve in terms of volume, pitch, tone or tempo? Recording quality-wise I moved my cpu tower to another room. I had to shut off the lamp bc it was emitting a persistent buzz. When i listen at normal volumes I don't hear them although if I turn the gain up on the mic I can still here the cpu as well as the turtle tank 15 feet away in another room! Are those things coming through when you listen at the volume that a casting director would listen at? If so it's something I'll keep in mind for my upcoming soundproofing project. I tried to reduce the plosives. I think I heard two noticeable"p" plosives. I've been trying to look slightly to the side so I don't puff right at the mic. Any other tips? As always, thank you for the feedback, Graham

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    Peer Feedback:

    The overall sound quality is a bit echo-y - room echo. You need further sound deaden your recording environment. Only way to lessen and/or eliminate it. If you're handy, you could construct some free standing panels to close off the room and surround yourself to block out the sound from your fish tank, computer, etc. (which I did not hear here) and further deaden your (smaller than a room) recording space.

    Here's a link to the first in a series of videos to show you how to build them rather inexpensively:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=spg4y5_zsM

    They are quite effective if you have no other solution.

    Don't forget to treat the ceiling (a quilt or packing blanket or something) and the floor (carpeting, etc.).

    Don't assume that if you record at a lower input level (or process it at a lower dB than between -6dB & -3dB) that the noise or echo will be lessened or eliminated. You may not detect as much (because the volume is low), but it's all still in there. So if you sent a recording in as an audition and the volume is low and the auditioner has to turn up the volume to hear it, all of the recording flaws will assault their ears just the same as if you normalized (or recorded) the audition at a -6dB to -3dB peak level.

    A good portion of the copy is very articulate. But there were some places where you muffed it or got a little lazy. I need just a "tap" of a T's on "Atlanta". What I heard was "Adlanuh". In the next sentence you got all of the D's and T's nice and crisp, with the exception of "breakfess sanwiches". (Same with the second "sandwiches" too. Missed a tapped D.)

    Detectable hard edit after "coffees".

    A little plosive pop on "pastries".

    Here's a link to a pop filter that I have found to be very effective:

    https://www.editorskeys.com/products/recording-equipment/dual-layer-pop-...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Rick.D's recording

    This is a redo, first on was a little too subdued

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    Peer Feedback:

    I went back and played your previous offering for a comparison.

    On this one, you trailed downward in inflection at the end of every sentence - even the one with the exclamation point - and sometimes at a comma. On your previous one, it was nearly the opposite. You went up a lot more. A combination of the two would be more the ideal - the way people talk in normal conversation.

    Peer Feedback:

    Rick D
    I like your read, are far as subdued it came across as a hint of Tom Bodet from Motel
    6.
    I'll leave the VO light on for you.
    Craig

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Craig, i hear some Motel 6 'esqeness to your read. I liked the pace and enuncuation. Well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank for the input guys. I'm still new to all this and trying to get as much teaching anywhere I can.

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    Bailey's Caramel and Mint Chocolate

    Script:

    Baileys Caramel and Mint Chocolate
    Until now, the major flaw in favoritism was that you could only have one favorite in any category. But the introduction of two delicious new flavors from Baileys - tempting Caramel and classic Mint Chocolate - proves having one favorite quite insufficient. Thus you may, as of now, be partial to romance movies, sci-fi flicks, and documentaries, and keep a dog, a cat and a fish, as your favorite pet. You may have three favorite songs, three favorite uncles, and three best friends, who naturally enjoy your three favorite drinks: Original and new Caramel and Mint Chocolate Baileys. Two more smooth, creamy favorites, from your favorite.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear 's recording

    Going for kind of a professorial tone in my delivery here, especially in the middle section. Haven't submitted many commercial reads but am enjoying the change of pace. Any feedback is appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3974/script-recording-31885.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Bill, if a professional tone was your goal, then I'd say you succeeded. The mild posh tone was most appropriate. The clearing of the throat was a nice touch as it accentuated the humor in the copy quite nicely. Well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Professorial...like a professor or teacher, Javier. ;-) Though I like your choice; posh works for me too. Not sure I could get away with the throat clearing, but I wanted to stand out. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oops, I read professional.. again! Bill, BTW, look what you started: http://www.edgestudio.com/script/31795#recording-31796#comment-24390 : )

    Peer Feedback:

    Correction: Look what YOU started, Mister. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Like the little 'ahem' you put in. I think you hit the tone just right, Bill. Another great read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job Bill! Spot on with pace and tone. I really enjoyed that!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it was great. Kind of a bold thing to do considering Freeman's voice is so recognizable. I assume you aren't a full-time voice impersonator.
    The recording quality was fine; very clear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bill,

    I liked the delivery, especially the clearing of the throat which enhanced the read. Good tone and nice emotion. Well done!

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bill, you may be right. These guys are ruthless though. But it's ok, I think it's hillarious! Hey btw.was turner73's comment for someone else?

    Peer Feedback:

    Javier, you guys are a fun bunch. I'd like to join one of your Skype calls sometime. Yeah, I'm thinking turnier73 was referring to one of the Morgan Freeman reads, maybe yours?

    Peer Feedback:

    Ruthless? You must be talking about Rich, Javier!!

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    Baileys Caramel and Mint Chocolate

    Script:

    Until now, the major flaw in favoritism was that you could only have one favorite in any category. But the introduction of two delicious new flavors from Baileys tempting caramel and classic mint chocolate proves having one favorite quite insufficient. Thus you may, as of now, be partial to romance movies, sci-fi flicks, and documentaries, and keep a dog, a cat and a fish, as your favorite pet. You may have three favorite songs, three favorite uncles, and three best friends, who naturally enjoy your three favorite drinks: Original, and new Caramel and Mint chocolate Baileys. Two more smooth, creamy favorites, from your favorite.
    Baileys reminds you to please drink responsibly.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I am reading my script from braille on this recording. I'm trying to keep my delivery as natural as possible although I don't read as far ahead of my speech as I would like. I'm working on it. Help would be appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a pleasant voice with a very playful tone. It does work well with the copy. The only thing I would suggest reading through the copy several times and doing many practice runs. I realize that reading from braille does make this more difficult - have you thought of trying to commit some or all of the script to memory? Getting it into a more conversational tone is going to be the most help, and I can't wait to hear it!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear smatth1's recording

    Just a test

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good performance. Lots of echo.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Sounded like you recorded it in your tiled bathroom. Lots of echo.

    I'm a huge proponent of ignoring punctuation. However, there is something to be said for it when the copy is written fairly well, as this is.

    The first comma needs to be observed in such a way that it sets up the rest of the thought. Maybe not a full stop, but just a little glottal separation. Sort of like you've come in on a conversation that's already been going on. Somebody has said, "There's only one favorite that any one person can have at any one time." Then you say, " (Y'know) Until now, the major flaw in favoritism..." Or if you take a breath at the comma, you will be able to finish the rest of that thought through without the breath you did take in the middle of the sentence.

    Then you plowed right into the next thought (the next sentence) so that it sounded like a continuation of the first - you didn't observe the period. It also started with a pretty high inflection point, which drew emphasis to the beginning of the sentence rather than the more operative words "two delicious new flavors". And then you need to "billboard" those two flavors just a little, they're what the commercial is all about.

    There's a little mouth noise in here as well. And the obvious "click" at the end that screams, "I'm done recording now," could have been edited out.

    Peer Feedback:

    Moving up in the world. i thank you for your observations mainly for taking the time to offer a critique. I submitted this script to kind of evaluate where I need to go with my"studio". I obviously have some echo problems and will continue to work at that until I get it right.Thanks again for assisting me in bringing my performance up . I really appreciate it

    Peer Feedback:

    Former radio experience?

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, for too many years!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    The techniques learned for the radio delivery are kind of hard to break for other genres. It's not impossible, but that seems like an ingrained behavior or habit for a lot of radio vets. Takes a lot of practice for a lot of former jocks and announcers. You have a marketable sound, obviously. The reason I asked about previous experience on radio is because I heard that tone/timbre/delivery in your read. Some people with no experience will try and bring that delivery before finding out it's not a preferred thing in most genre's of VO. It's still pretty prevalent on radio, but it's also falling out of favor there.

    With practice and MAYBE some coaching, you can reign that in a little for a more conversational vibe. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for that, I hope to begin obtaining some coaching from Edge soon.That along with working on my home studio. I appreciate your observations, they are very helpful..

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    Baked Veggie Crisps

    Script:

    Why is it that the stuff that’s nutritious never seems to taste as good as the stuff that isn’t? Well, that’s about to change. Our Veggie Crisps are made with a wholesome blend of rice, potato and real vegetables. And here’s the humdinger. They’re super tasty too. That’s right - we made the impossible, impossibly good. New Flat Earth Baked Veggie Crisps.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuBose's recording

    Veggie Crisps is hard to say - did "veggie crisps" come out alright? Are there any words I hit too hard? Some I rushed through?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you sound great! Very upbeat, and with a sense of humor -- fitting of the script.

    I agree with you -- I think "crisps" is a tricky word -- but I'd say you got it. If anything -- and this is very subjective! -- I might like to hear it a tad faster.

    Nicely done!

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    Click to hear Beverly Ann's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I feel like you were spot on with the wording, but maybe some more energy?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Beverly Ann. I would definitely put more energy in it and you might wanna start off with a frustrating complaining tone of why nutritious food doesn't taste as good as non-nutritious. Emphasize the humdinger and they're super tasty too. Good effort.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm going to give you my bug-a-boo about punctuation. First of all, ask the question with an upward-ish inflection, even if it's rhetorical like it is here. "Well" is not an important word, ignore the comma.

    Have you done the Technique 101 yet? "That's right-" is a good place for what Danielle calls a "pivot". There is a lot of good stuff in this read.

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    Balance Bar

    Script:

    A six-pack of lite beer is still a six-pack of beer. Eat with your head. With it's 40-30-30 ratio of carbs, protein and dietary fat, Balance Bar is a great-tasting way to give your body the nutrition it needs. Plus it has 23 essential vitamins and minerals. To learn more, log on to Balance.com. Balance Bar. Eat with your head.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jonathantcoleman's recording

    Hi everyone, this is my very first peer recording! Excited to be really digging in, but nervous that this is so much more complex than I could ever have anticipated. For this script I wanted to push in a very specific emotional direction, but I'm worried I sound too tired and it doesn't make for a compelling spot. Would love thoughts and pointers from all you seasoned professionals :)

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like it quite a lot...all the best and God bless!

    Peer Feedback:

    Spot on Jonathan. I wouldn't change a thing, excellent sound quality, perfect back round and very believable. I like how you sounded very natural and didn't come off as announcer-ish or sales pitchy. I'm so glad you posted it because it's exactly what I'm trying to mimic. Keep up the good work, good luck & Voice on!

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to admit that this one confuses me a bit. You DO sound tired. The music lends an upbeat tone,but you deliver this with what sounds like you NEED some balance bars injected directly to your bloodstream. I THINK I heard a little smile in a couple of spots, but it was fleeting. I think a sarcastic tone on the first sentence would be OK, but then you should turn to an encouraging one at "EAT with your head" put a little more life into the tone. You can do it without going overboard with the smile. Good voice, but the delivery is where you need to pump it up a little. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would think you should spend more time on connecting with the copy and personalizing it, instead of laying down backing music which is unnecessary.
    It sounds too much like your reading a list and not relating information that means something to you or the person who you are trying to communicate with.
    You can never be too real or conversational...seems that's been the trend for a while now...personal and conversational.
    No matter how awkward the copy might be...we need to try and own it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mrwolfe's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice, rich voice but I think you are trying too hard to use it. I have found that one of the hardest things about VO is trying to not "put on" a fake voice when I step in front of the mic. There is something about walking into the booth or switching the mic on that triggers your brain to say "now I must perform!!!!". Try and listen to how Morgan Freeman delivers his lines. I think this would work with your voice and tone. Nice and easy with a great flow!
    Good luck and keep practicing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice - very friendly yet authoritative. I'd say be more conversational. Makes it sound more natural. I agree with the prior comment - we tend to force things when on mic. I've been struggling with the same problem. A little more conversational tone to this and it'd be a nice read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback

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    Balducci's

    Script:

    Can your food market pass a simple taste test? At Balducci’s, the food lover’s market, we put taste first. And this spring, we’re loading up our stores with fresh and chef-crafted foods that are simply bursting with flavor. Like majestic orange wild king salmon, flown in daily. And specialties like champagne ham, slow-smoked over hickory chips and glazed with pineapple juice and brown sugar…….We think stores that focus on ingredient lists are all well and good…. But now there’s a store that puts taste first. Balducci’s. The food lover’s market.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Too much copy for a :30, not enough for a :60. And a :45 just seemed laboriously slow (without visuals). The Balducci's, down in Greenwich Village, is something to see. And smell! I have not seen nor heard a commercial for them in the many years that I have lived in and near NYC. They're doing alright by word-of-mouth.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm going to digest this one more and comment again, but what I'm hearing on initial listen is a disconnect with the script. You don't sound like you're in the family, an employee...or really someone who who would be really PO'd if the place went out of business. I'm still processing the listen...but that's the initial response. No involvement and pretty low-keyed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom - Maybe some Tumms are in order for that indigestion, huh? I'm not sure that this is a spot I'd called in for, but I did just do that Safeway audition, so... Probably why I picked it. I'll be in late tonight. Maybe talk to you then.

    Brian - Thanks for treating me like a (semi)pro. Yeah, I've been taking coachings and classes out the wazoo lately. I'd like a chance to chat outside of the Edge Forum if you wouldn't mind. I'm Skyping now. Same name.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I listened again and it's a good read but I guess it just doesn't sell me? It's better than most reads lately (thanks to your tools) but I can't put my finger on what to say. I am overthinking....

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Marianne - I think, maybe, this is what was missing for TxTom with my read. It needs a feminine voice. Much more effective IMHO. I noticed you came in at :32. This is a lot of copy tor a :30 spot. I'm not sure how it can be shaved down and still not sound rushed.
    Nice and bright. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James - thanks very much. I really appreciate your feedback. By the way, I see that several of you are on Skype. Do you only get together in the evening? Are any of you on during the day? Marianne

    Peer Feedback:

    Marianne - I can't speak for the other guys. I was invited in to their party by being contacted by them. TxTom or Richurd might the guys to talk to about that. But if you happen to see me on there and want to chat and I wasn't tied up with something else (like recording), that would be fine.

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    Barilla

    Script:

    For centuries spaghetti has remained the same - until now. Introducing Barilla Spaghetti Rigati, the first spaghetti made with ridges to hold more sauce. No wonder why it’s Italy’s number one brand of pasta. Italian meals will never be the same.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    I know the sound quality isn't great. Please comment on my performance. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    That was actually very good. You didn't stumble over that line, "No wonder why it's Italy's number one..." I would have messed that up. Probably because I'm a stickler for grammar but sweet commercial script reading.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Adriaan Taylor's recording

    I wanted to get some feedback about the tonality and suitability of my voice for doing these kind of gigs. Some people I know just are not a good fit for the announcer type of reads. Any thoughts you might have about ways to improve would be appreciated. CJ

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think this one is my favorite. I think you voice is perfect for this type of ad. You sound like a surfer!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your voice is a good match for this kind of script. Like the attitude you deliver. Very cool. The pauses between the final few lines seem just a tad long, in my opinion. Well done.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    Been down in my studio for 3mo's.But now I'm Back

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    Peer Feedback:

    Just a little too "in your face" for my taste. I'm imagining a little more of a Barry White or Don Cornelius for this copy in that sultry, sexy "After Dark" attitude - which I am sure you are capable of delivering. A good fit for the music bed that you chose for it. This got a little more "Sunday! Sunday! Sunday! Funny Cars!" for me (I'm exaggerating a little).

    First sentence: Ignore the comma (the full stop chops it up from the get-go), elide into the next part and say the contraction (you've). You said "you have".

    The articulation is also a little sloppy. "After Dark" sounded like "Avder Dawg" (both times), "Sunset Strip" sounded like "Sunsaid Strih" and "hook up with" sounded like "hoogupwhih". Watch "yer" for "you're". Even if you are going really "urban" (which is being done a lot these days), make it "real" and not a characature. I still need to understand the message.

    Production quality is good though.

    I'm picking on you, Lonnie, because I've heard much better from you.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Working til I get it right.Thank's for listen

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good tone and attitude for this particular copy. There are a couple of pronunciations you could improve for greater listener understanding. One of the times you read the name of the beer it sounded like After Dog.

    In a short 30-second spot like this, the energy can get lost if too many breath breaks are as evident as they are. Try planning out when you will take your breaths so that it doesn't break up the copy so much. Try using larger and less breaths as well (part of planning) and you'll probably find it's easier to deliver more copy with less breath effort.

    If you're struggling to make this exactly 30 seconds, and the copy is too little to keep the energy up with a slightly faster read, perhaps you could make it a 20-second spot instead?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    Working til I get it right.Thank's for listen

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    Peer Feedback:

    ramjamz, great voice!!! i think the reading could be just little smoother, other than that you will get it!!!

    ramjamz

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice! I want to be at that event! I would make it a bit smoother, as the earlier critique suggested. Give us a place to rest our ears. Great voice.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Adriaan Taylor's recording

    I wanted to get some feedback about the tonality and suitability of my voice for doing these kind of gigs. Some people I know just are not a good fit for the announcer type of reads. Any thoughts you might have about ways to improve would be appreciated. CJ

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice grabs me right from the start. Good fit for youthful scripts like this. I think you could hit certain words more. In the first line, you drop the word "rocked" for instance. Work on connecting with the words/audience more; you've got a great voice in my opinion.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi There cjadams,

    I really liked the loop that you had in the background, it fit perfectly with this type of script! You voice also suited this script, you have a nice tone. I noticed that the word, "holding" you said "holdin" sounded a little slurred to me. I am working on that myself.

    Wishing you the best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    cjadams --
    I really like the voice. Nice performance too.
    Agree with the previous comments on a couple pickups, but overall nice. Definitely marketable.

    cheers!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    You picked a good music bed, but you really should deliver more attitude...more 'umph' to the read. I think you could deliver that.

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    Beer Story

    Script:

    Next time you order a pint, you'll find you taste something that isn't in the recipe.
    It doesn't come from the hops. Or the two-row malted barley.
    We like to call it character.
    It's hard to define but easy to recognize.
    You find it in great men. And great beers.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BloombergVO's recording

    Changed the words up slightly. Looking forward to getting feedback. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice spot. May want to give a little more emphasis/articulation to "...two-row malted barley" because it's not an expression that is well known. It's a mouthful.

    You might also take just a tiny bit more time with it since it is probably a :30 spot - not that you have to fill all of that time since there will probably be visuals upfront and maybe a tag done by another voice or a graphic at the end.

    Each sentence (even though the entire thing ties together quite nicely) could (almost) stand alone as a separate idea. One way of thinking about it is something that was suggested to me by one of my coaches. Deliver the lines like the thoughts are coming to you spontaneously - but in that pondering way, in that you really don't know exactly what you're going to say next. (example: A slight pause before "character" - because you could have said "crap" or any number of words. Let the word formulate in your mind before it comes out of your mouth. Let me hear you thinking.)

    Watch that little laugh on/before, "We like to call it character." (Just a little pet peeve of mine.) It sounds a little "superior". Just smile as you say the line, it'll come through in the voice.

    Just curious. Why did you alter the script?

    Good stuff.

    (How's that for a sandwich?)

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with jamesromick, Maybe slow down a bit more. Maybe a little more attitude? Thanks for your input earlier on the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Job , I submitted this same read for feedback awhile ago and was given the same advice by James. A little more emphasis on two-row malted barley. And slow down a tad. Nice warm voice. Music fits nicely .

    Terry

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    Beer Story

    Script:

    Next time you oder a pint, you'll find you taste something that isn't in the recipe.
    It doesn't come from the hops. Or the two-row malted barley.
    We like to call it character.
    It's hard to define but easy to recognize.
    You find it in great men. And great beers.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jeffwallace217's recording

    Hi Everyone! I'm just starting to submit auditions through Voice123.com, and would love any feedback on both the quality of the recording - I've cobbled together a home studio, and the read. I'm going to post an audition in a completely different style and accent for feedback as well. Thanks! Jeff Wallace

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    Peer Feedback:

    Can't put my finger on it, but something is not flowing right. A little fast with little or no pause in the first line, and then it slows down and pauses more but not enough between the second and third lines.

    Peer Feedback:

    Once again, thanks for the constructive criticism on this read. In listening to it again, after reading your comments, I heard the same thing - pacing is something I'm working on in my conversational reads, so your comments are very helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto what Mitch said. Too fast in the beginning. I might
    - elongate "next" slightly so it will be heard clearly after the last ad or over the music
    - hit "pint" a little harder so the topic is clear (not a heavy hit, but maybe lifting the pitch a little so there's no chance that it's lost)
    - hit "isn't" harder, because that's setting up the punchline

    What I hear is an awesome conversational style without vocal tension, but just a bit too much so in the setup.

    But...might be all fine with just a slower read to start.

    I'm not even going to touch your CR2 one. I'm too much of a newbie and have no clue on accents!

    Peer Feedback:

    The upward inflection on character sounds a bit too cheery for a beer plug

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, excellent. Glad I got to hear your natural voice - which is also excellent. The recording sounded great! No "S" issues with this one. Any settings change?

    Ditto on the "character" inflection. Up to that point, the tone felt confident, stating the facts as they are from a man who knows what he wants in his beer. So the upwards inflection on "character" felt a little out of place.

    Otherwise, I thought it was really good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello again everyone! -

    Thanks for all the great feedback on this recording. I've taken everything in, and I do hear the apcing and inflection problem areas that took away from the read. I'm applying all this great constructive critisism to my conversational auditions, and seem to be getting good feedback so far. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    similar feedback: more fluid, less dead air
    make it more personal, like you really love beer
    I would try shooting for deeper darker masculine approach,
    which you started to hit at the end of the spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    i like the tone of your voice the recording quality wasn't bad either id say your off to a good start on voices 123 which i will be joining myself here pretty soon.

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    Ben & Jerry's Freezer Fairies

    Script:

    Fairy 1: Hey, it's us. The Ben & Jerry's Freezer Fairies. That's what we said. Ben & Jerry's Freezer Fairies. You know some people don't believe in Freezer Fairies. Doesn't bother us. We know we're here.

    Fairy 2: So listen up. Here's how it works. Do something good out there in the world and bang. We stick a pint or two of Ben & Jerry's in your freezer when no one is looking.

    Fairy 1: Now, do something bad and boom! No Ben & Jerry's. Plus we stick something really weird in your freezer like frozen clams.

    Fairy 2: Hey! We ain't no lightweight fairies that tap dance on moonbeams and stuff.

    Fairy 1: Yeah, we work for a living. We got bills to pay.

    Fairy 2: Just like you guys.

    Fairy 1: Okay, settle down you guys. Us Freezer Fairies can be sensitive too.

    Fairy 2: So where were we?

    Fairy 1: Let's review. Do something good....

    Fairy 2: We sneak some Ben & Jerry's into your freezer. Maybe some Cherry Garcia.

    Fairy 1: Or some Chunky Monkey. But do something bad....

    Fairy 2: And no Ben & Jerry's in YOUR freezer!

    Fairy 1: Plus we mess with your head a little bit.

    Fairy 2: OK, till next time. We wish you a freezer full of love and surprises.

    Fairy 1: Be good out there.

    Fairy 2: OR ELSE!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    This is myself and my son, Jack, who I am always trying to get to record with me. Any and all comments appreciated!! Thanks. Marianne

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    Peer Feedback:

    I loved the editing on this. It created timing that would have been very difficult to do otherwise. Good work guy and gal.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, had lots of fun!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very entertaining. Your New York accents and characters sounded good to me. Keep having fun!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Javier!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Another script I'm re-recording. Please comment on performance only and would appreciate constructive, courteous, and positive feedback. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy LC,

    I may be quibbling, but I think that the pause between smooth and jazz is a bit too long. Overall your pacing is great, but this one pause seems just a spot over the top for me.

    OTHER than that, nigh on perfect! You have a lovely voice!

    Regards,

    SteveO

    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy to you to Steve!

    I paused between "smooth and jazz", as I wanted to give the read a certain effect. I've listened to some of your recordings too and I loved the Mcafee Network Security and Home Depot scripts you did.

    Thank you so much for you comment!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Perfect voice for this clip...great music and nice delivery....thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marianna,

    I'm glad you enjoyed this and I just want to say that I love your work! I was telling my friend Nodo that I think you are the best Female VO Talent on this forum!

    Thank you so much for your comment.

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very kind words LCW...but there are lots of great female voices here...including you. I understand that Edge will be offering a forum in the near future so that we can all share ideas outside of this forum....looking forward to getting to know you better. Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh, no!! people are going to realize how mean I really am!

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    Ha, Ha, and Ha Tom!!! LOL!!!

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    Hi Lenny, I agree with Sosullivan in that it would have sounded better if you had said "smooth jazz" instead of "smooth..... jazz." It just broke the nice flow of the read a little. But the voice tone is there, and so is the music - very nice. Good to hear another recording of yours. Keep up the good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your inflection on the "Blue Note Cafe" which made it stand out just right. Great tone overall!

    Tom, everyone already knows just how mean you really are! LOL.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Javier,

    I know in separating "smooth" and jazz" may not have been a good thing to do, but I was trying to go for a certain effect. However, I'm glad you enjoyed it and I'm working on some more scripts which I'll upload shortly.

    All the best,
    Lenny (LCW)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bill,

    First I'd like to begin by saying that you have a great voice, as I've heard some of your recordings which I was very impressed by.

    I'm glad you enjoyed the performance and in regards to Tom...he's actually a sweetheart and a great guy to know!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    That was May, this is now. When can I hear more of your recordings? Great voice, dead on for this script. Loved it. Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi My Friend,

    I think that your voice was just what this script needed, Great Job!! Keep up the great work!

    Blessings,
    Carol

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    I was going after a certain effect. Therefore I paused after the first line "Smooth Jazz" on purpose, as I visualized this script in regards to a jazz club and the environment and also wanted to market the ad to appeal to the audience. Please comment and would appreciate constructive and positive feedback. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, I'm thinking of a number ,,,now you tell me what number you think it is, and how close the two numbers are...

    That's basicly what you've asked us for above. We are left to assume, what "Style" you were referring to. So, being that the spot is of a smooth Jazz style,, I'll assume your going after the matching style. A slow, smooth, flowing , yet vocally dynamic style. Or we can take your explanation of the pause , as you must have done it perfect, and we just don't understand the style. Seeing that in the second scenario, you don't really need us. It would be like telling a joke that no one gets,, then thinking explaining it will help. I'll go with the first scenario, I'm assuming you are looking to do a style that matches the content, and the background music. I found it choppy and disjointed. Even if your going more for the style where things dont flow so much, and semi randomly “pop”. Still didn't work for me. I would put Smooth and Jazz together. Other wise you are vocally, doing the opposite of what the words are saying, and implying. If this were a Jazz music piece, you vocally did the equivalent of a trumpet making a sound of Bop,,, Bop at the start of the spot. What I think your more looking for, is a elongated tonal slide, more of a trumpet doing a Whaawhaa sound. And sure there may be a break in the sound, but its more a slide into it, rather than a dramatic break. So I would rethink the delivery of “Smooth Jazz” , both in vocalization, and overall style.

    Otherwise, I like the rest of the spot. Great tone for it, and nice voice for it. The last pause worked well, do to the “punch” the background music filling in between the words. Great overall sound quality. I'm torn on the background,, although, its great music, and would fit right in on a smooth jazz station, it may be helping to lead you into a more choppy delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi KMN,

    I'm going to do this over and put "Smooth Jazz" together, as well as use a different bed of music. You're right about the music, eventhough it is a good jazz instrumental; it may be too distracting for the read in itself. I also will deliver it, with a little more emotion but not go over the top. Thank you so much for your comment and suggestions. LCW.

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    Blue Note

    Script:

    Smooth jazz. Great food.The Blue Note Cafe. San Fransisco

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear NGB93's recording

    I am playing around with styles,scripts and equipment. Any and all commentary is welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Make this more specific--right now it is too general. For "smooth jazz"--exactly what piece of jazz do you have in mind when you say this? What composer? What track? Why did you chose it and how does it make you feel when you hear it? for "great food"--what does that mean to you? What are you eating when you say this and how does it taste? right now it is all too homogenous. I understand that you are going for a langorous feel overall but is coming across as you trying to experience something instead of simply experiencing it and letting us hear it in your voice. Have you been to this cafe? Seen pics of it? Same thing for San Fran. More specificity and clarity for each topic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the languorous tone of your voice in this recording. Personally, I think it's harder to do short spots like this one than longer reads. I heard a little hiss going on throughout the recording. I'm not an audio expert so won't try to make any suggestions as to what is causing the hiss. Otherwise the recording quality was fine. No echo and your voice sounded nice and clear.

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    Blue Ox Beef Jerky

    Script:

    Our jerky punches gas station jerky in the face!
    Seriously, this is the best beef jerky you can find.
    Man up, and take it for a spin!
    The Blue Ox Beef Jerky Company.
    Real men eat jerky!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear joshr1979's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your read sounds quite a bit like a tentative Jack Nicholson impersonation. The pacing was ok to listen to, but could be even quicker, and more connection with the meaning and more energy overall would improve this. I didn't feel that you really believe it when you say "this is the best beef jerky you can find". I couldn't hear the first "jerky" well enough to understand the topic. Your interesting spin on the tag-line stood out.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Here's another take on a script I uploaded yesterday and got a good amount of feedback on it...the common denominator was it needed to be more upscale (which can encompass MANY definitions) and less radio guy. I also thought I was adding an extra word...come to find out, I left it out as I typed in the script! But, I have done that before...I would like to leave it up to you to hear if the proper corrections were made and if I seem "directable"...

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't know if it's you're recording settings or your delivery that's bringing that radio sound to the delivery....but by 'sophisticated' delivery (I think was my suggestion) meant to bring a more intelligent, perhaps monied, perhaps educated sound. That, to me would be more intimate and personal, yet confident and knowledgable. How is THAT for direction? LOL. I'm hearing the radio sound. Relax from that sound. Do you talk to your buddies in that voice? I think the quick and short critique is that I'm hearing someone delivering a script and not conversing with me. Keep working at it. I think you've got potential, but you're going to have to break some habits.

    Peer Feedback:

    FYI - You don't have to type out the scripts every time you post a recording. If you look at a script in the library, you will see two blue "click here" links underneath, one for peer feedback and one for professional feedback. Click one and it will take you to the page where you can post your recording. The script will appear automatically.

    Agree with Tom. You corrected the colloquialisms, but you still have that pushed radio announcer type sound. Think about talking intimately to a single person to convince them that this is the only gin he or she should even consider drinking.

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    Bombay Gin

    Script:

    It's simple, really. Either you want to drink the best gin...or you don't. Bombay Saphire. Gin...only better.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Something short and sweet, two takes on this one, both slightly different. Still seeing if I can interpret the script in a viable way... David Michaelson

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    Peer Feedback:

    I preferred the first take, although they both seemed just a little forced. It gives away your "radio" back ground. KISS - Keep It Simple (I won't call you Stupid). You added a word on both takes. Read the first sentence. There's no "pretty" in there. And since this is an "upscale" gin, " ya wanna" and "ya don" ain't gonna to cut it.

    Peer Feedback:

    That's the second time I've added a word! I wonder if that's a rookie mistake or it's just me...

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah..this needs a sophisticated sound...upscale it is. The writer will give you such a pinch for deviating from their sage writings. Ya gotta cut loose from that radio sound, man. I know it's still out there, but it's not preferred on something like this script.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this. I prefer the first take. Funky how you added a word, accidentally. (I kept dropping a word from a script yesterday and I was totally oblivious to it.) I figured you'd added the word to up the conversational, easy-going feel of your read. I hear what Tom's saying about getting upscale since this gin is pretty pricey. Would be fun to do this version as a second take on an audition, with the first being more sophisticated. It would give the client options and show your skills in the other direction in case they had another job that might fit the style. The last line in both sounds a little bit pushed--not quite your authentic voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Adding or subtracting words are not rookie mistakes. Watch this! It happens at 2:21 into the video.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kQEXpHHVJEc

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't hear much of a difference between the two takes. Maybe you could do another take and change or even eliminate the pauses between "or" and "you don't" and "only" and "better." Otherwise everything sounds good, although just a bit radio-ad sounding.

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    Bombay Gin

    Script:

    It’s pretty simple really. Either you want to drink the best gin … or you don’t. Bombay Sapphire. Gin … only better.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Knocked out a short one. Something like an ad I'd want to put on my demo.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hard to imagine this being done any better. NICE.

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    Very good! I'm not a drinker, but I'd buy Bombay Saphire! :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Very cool, not much to critique here in my opinion. If you want to spice it up a bit give a james bond feel to it. That would stand out even more.
    Good job
    http://youtu.be/OUUq5mRCimo
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't drink either. But this smooth guy might talk me into it. hahaha

    Nice work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James, I like this, it is slick, simple and direct. The pacing is perfect in my opinion. I just wonder, did you mean to miss out the words "want to" as this does bring in the element of choice and changes the meaning slightly? Nice read! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read. Though as personal taste I think I'd have scrapped the "Only better" for a better inflection.

    Peer Feedback:

    nice read, nice voice, but you changed the meaning of the spot by dropping the word "want".

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    Bombay Gin

    Script:

    It's pretty simple really. Either you want to drink the best gin ... or you don't. Bombay Sapphire. Gin ... only better.

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JasonArnold's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi There. I really enjoyed listening to your voiceover. I thought the pace was perfect and recording quality was excellent.

    Peer Feedback:

    The "attitude" could be a little more snooty and snarky and smug. It's a slam on all other gins on the market. Elite. Top shelf.

    Couple of mouth noise things. Big one before "Gin ... only better."

    Tiny bet of room echo.

    How close are you working to the mic? This could be tight and intimate - closer to the mic and less full-voiced, like you're only 2 or 3 inches from someone's ear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

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    Bombay Gin

    Script:

    It’s pretty simple really. Either you want to drink the best gin … or you don’t. Bombay Sapphire. Gin … only better.

    109 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Brunner's recording

    Hi all! Thanks for the tips from my previous post. I made some adjustments and am quite satisfied with the sound. I also covered my wooden floor with some towels and blankets. I turned up the gain and still heard a bit of background noise. I was able to capture the noise and remove it from the recording. I did this when the gain was lower and it changed the sound of the vocals. Now with the gained turned up, it didn't remove anything from my voice. I recorded this in one take and am looking more for feedback with the recording not really the performance. The recording has two parts, the first is my dry voice and the second with music & bar ambiance. Is the recording quality good enough for home projects and voices.com? Thanks again!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice voice and I didn't listen to your first recording. I like the music on this, sort of fits the Gin. You sound nice and relaxed. As far as technical sound wise...... sounded ok on my equipment. Good luck.

    Christine.

    Peer Feedback:

    It still sounds a bit "hollow" and distant, like there are artifacts left in (or frequencies left out of) your voice. Sounds like you're talking into a metal tube about a foot away from the mic. Sorry to say that, IMHO, it is still not quite audition quality yet.

    I would be curious as to how close you are working to the mic. Are you standing or sitting? What level (peak dB) are you recording to?

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with James. the audio has what sounds like room noise to me;
    and I think you could add some enthusiasm or confidence to the read. I get that it's not Bud Light Lime - Bombay is a premium value product - it shouldn't sound tentative.

    I like the 2nd take with the jazzy ambiance music bed - that adds a nice context. it's sounds like a "classy" occasion.

    hope that's helpful, cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Comes across very casual and unimposing. I would recommend working the mic a little closer for a more intimate person-to-person message. The party atmosphere background track is a nice touch.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a thought MIke. What are you listening to yourself with during playback? I just got a new pair of headphones Sony MDR-7506, and they make a world of difference in hearing things such as the room noise, hollowness, etc that everyone is mentioning. Just as everyone encouraged me to do, make sure you have a quality set of studio speakers/headphones for playback and editing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the critical feedback everybody! Much appreciated. It is quite a challenge to get the right sound. I just ordered 24 more Auralex panels to cover the walls just outside of my recording area. I have some cheap headphones but will be buying a studio quality one when I travel to the US. They are very expensive in Europe.

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    Bombay Sapphire Gin Commercial

    Script:

    It's pretty simple, really. Either you want to drink the best gin, or you don't. Bombay Sapphire. Gin ... only better.

    27 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JonWessel's recording

    I am using a new mic. How does it sound? What do you think of the vocal quality for this type of commercial?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello JonWessel!

    I'm new to VO, so my feedback is based on my limited experience...

    Your recording quality sounded crisp and clean. You have a high pitched voice and the mic definitely accentuates your voice. This may be either good or bad depending on what might be required in a particular read.

    Your read was a bit fast for me. I wanted you to slow down and draw me in. Oh yes, I'm a Bourbon drinker, so I really need you to motivate me! Also you said Ither, I say ether...for me pronouncing either like ether would sound better to me than an i sound, although on an audition it might be the Director's call.

    Good luck!! Keep up the good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jon,
    You seem to know how it should sound but just don't have the tone and texture in your voice yet to deliver this kind of commercial read. I know it's tempting to do these reads but it is far more important for you to pick voice appropriate scripts. Know your instrument and play the music that works with your instrument.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jon,

    The mic sounds nice for your voice. The read was good, a little rushed in parts and your voice was a bit young for this script, in my opinion. I can see casting you for teen (perhaps even younger depending on your range) to early 20's work right now. This script has a more mature and sophisticated feel and the Client would also look to that demographic to sell their product.

    Now that you have the gear, focus on getting styled into a genre (video games, kids shows, younger sounding scripts) and nail it. I think you have the potential to do well in this business. You have a great sounding voice.

    Daniel

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear pwittenb's recording

    I've been gone for a while (years) and looking to hone my skills. I picked this script the other day after seeing someone do it. Now I see others have done it and wished I'd picked something else. ;) I'd appreciate any commentary.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I've only been in the game for a few years now. But even over that short period of time, the business has changed considerably. But jump in, the water's fine.

    Good idea to proof and proof again. As the old woodworking adage goes, "Measure Twice, Cut Once." You juxtaposed the words of the first sentence. It reads:

    "It's pretty simple really." instead of "It's really pretty simple."

    A subtle difference, but one that I'm sure the copy writer pondered over long and hard. Perhaps, for more clarity, a comma was in order.

    "It's pretty simple, really."

    The recording quality is pretty good, really. There is some "fuss" underlying the recording. My guess is that it's ambient room tone amplified through the normalization process. A noise reduction plugin may take care of that. Recording a little hotter on input and backing off on your overall vocal volume (a more intimate a delivery) might a choice as well.

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    67 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gheilweil66's recording

    I know about the room echo. Going to be a little while before I settle on exactly what I want to do to fix it. Plosives- Let me know on a scale of 1-10 how bad they are. 10 being the worst. (i'f you want to of course). I have a pop filter, speak to the side and am editing but some of them may still sneak in. Performance- Tone. Took James's advice to smile but don't chuckle, Hope I really communicated my smile at a good pace. Any area where maybe my delivery is too low or high in energy? Any spots that could have benefited from a different pitch? Did I stay within a reasonable range throughout in terms of energy and pitch? I keep on recording at a volume that is a little too low. Is the "Amplify" effect a good solution for that? I forgot to use it this time although my speakers seemed to be hitting me with good volume when I listened. with the output knob at 50%. Would this be considered for an audition? Thanks, Graham

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    Peer Feedback:

    That was good. Kinda sounded a radio spot I've heard while showering.

    Peer Feedback:

    There's a term that a lot of teachers (in all fields) use. "Analysis Paralysis" You can actually over analyze and/or over intellectualize something to a point where you can get in your own way.

    So, OK. Think about all of that stuff. Then get back to KISS (and I ain't callin' ya stupid).

    Basically, you're relating this warm and fuzzy nostalgic memory to someone (a single person) who is a contemporary and is like minded. You certainly would want to say this to someone who has never experienced a fresh baked apple pie or hates his or her Mom now, would ya?

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    30 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Miranda's recording

    Hi. My first practice recording, so please be gentle! Recording quality is dreadful - it's recorded with my phone on the in-line mic. I've got a better mic coming on Monday, hopefully. I'm mainly interested in comments on performance. I'm not sure if I'm hearing some mouth noises, or it is just the crackling from the dodgy mic I'm using. I'm also not very good at editing yet! (I'm using iAudition on my phone.) I found it challenging to get this script in on time. I've used my native accent and pronunciation. Thanks for listening!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like it. Have to get past the notion that this particular script is meant to invoke a wholesome traditional American nostalgic feel, and that doesn't quite work with your accent (you'd never be cast for this spot in real life, but hey, it's still great practice - check out TxTom's "Always Overnight" recording and my "O.b Tampons" recording) - but your read flows nicely, you hit all the right highlights and you have a nice voice. That all comes through despite the microphone issue.

    Looking forward to hearing more reads with your new mic, but don't worry too much about the recording quality right now. There are a bunch of people on here who will do their best to help you improve it (as much as we can without actually seeing the room you're using or touching your equipment...)

    Peer Feedback:

    You definitely seem to have a good sense of what your saying as far as what to emphasize and the general timing i.e. makin' it real. The accent is lovely. Will be interesting to hear you when you get the mic.

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    I liked your read. Your voice and accent are wonderful. I agree with Sundance Kid. You are doing the best you can with what you have to work with and I admire that. I'm actually doing the same thing. It'll be great to hear you with the new mic.

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    Hi Miranda,

    I also love your beautiful accent! You are doing the best with what you have. If you like, you can check out my Youtube video, my husband built me a portable vocal booth. Just type in "Healthyful" I had a horrible echo, and a lot of background noise, this booth solved my problem and I am so thankful for it. I posted the video to help other people with those frustrating problems.

    Keep on practicing, I think that you have a great voice and accent and you will do well in this business!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, everyone, for your kind comments. I know this one was meant to evoke traditional American feelings, but with a tiny bit of tweaking, this script could work anywhere, I think - apple pie and vanilla ice cream being somewhat universal - and I liked that aspect. The "making it real" and sounding conversational is what I'm currently working on.

    Carol, I had a look at your recording booth - it looked fabulous! It gives me ideas for adapting a corner of my home office.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear cortneycastaneda's recording

    I just started taking VO lessons and was told that I need to work on my pitch. I'm also having problems showcasing the word "Bordens" without hitting the B to hard. Ive been practicing this script for the last couple of days and any feedback would be appreciated. Thank you :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-16378/script-recording-45456.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good voice and you showed good changes in pitch. I think you need some work in script interpretation on this one. it should have a more "down to earth, folksy" sound to it, with a warm conversational tone to it. Yours is a bit bubbly for this script.

    Here's a Smuckers commercial, http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aHKOxpKbrco&feature=relmfu. Listen to the pacing and tone of the read.

    Good luck with the lessons, you have some real promise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there! You have a lovely, clear voice and you are very expressive which is great, however your read does tend to be at the same volume throughout. I agree with teggray that you need more of a conversational tone, try to pick someone you know and imagine you are talking to them so it has a more intimate feel. To help with the pitch, try to put a background story to what you are reading, e.g. maybe try a conspiratorial tone for the second line, pretending that you are speaking to your best friend and that mom was really naughty in putting that scoop of ice cream on top of the pie and it was your shared secret. Rather than hitting most words, try to pick the ones you feel are most important so it flows more (e.g. you hit the 'made' in 'made with extra eggs' and it made it choppy). Just a little thing, there is a full stop after eggs, this may change your interpretation and read. I hope that helps, good luck with everything! Niki

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Courtney,
    teggray's critique is spot on. You have a fine voice but the wrong script. Why? Because your voice has a youthful tone to it. What teggray is pointing out is very important. Script interpretation is critical to your VO success. When you read the script, twice the word "remember" pops up, it's telling you the person speaking is drawing from memory. Hence he or she is no spring chicken. That then needs to show up in your voice. It lends authenticity to the dialogue. So given your type of voice it makes you wrong for the script. Your "bubbly" voice would be perfect elswhere but not here. Always ask yourself if your voice is suited to the material in question and be objective about it. I've read some great material that I just had to walk away from because it just wasn't written for me. Hope this in some way clarifies things.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all so much for your feedback. I felt a little awkward reading this script and didn't realize why but you are so right about this script not being right for me.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wouldn't say that the script isn't for you, but, perhaps that you're not ready for it? The script felt read with a smile as opposed to acted properly with a smiling tone. I felt the positive inflection you gave it was good, but it didn't vary throughout. That gave it a read feel to me. Good luck with the lessons, you have a good clear voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just wanted to add something else! I agree with TxTom, I don't necessarily think the script isn't for you, I just feel you need to analyse the script more and decide on an interpretation, give it a context. I believe this will help you with your pitch issues and variation as well (and will make you feel less awkward as it will give you a direction). You don't have to be an older person to deliver the copy, but the 'remembers' in the script do indicate that you are looking back on a memory and this should inform the way you say it. Are you nostalgic? Is it a happy memory? Does it make you smile? This will all help your acting, make it natural and real and, as TxTom says, give you that 'smiling tone' as opposed to a 'read with a smile'. Keep up the good work!!!

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    BORDEN’S ICE CREAM

    Script:

    Hey! Remember Mom’s apple pie? Remember when she used to put a big scoop of vanilla ice cream right on top? You can bring back those days and that wonderful taste with Borden’s Golden Vanilla Ice Cream. Borden’s borrowed a recipe from the past, when vanilla ice cream was made with extra eggs. This way we get a richer flavor, a creamier texture, and a deep golden color that lets you know that old-fashioned look and taste of homemade ice cream is back in style. Was it ever out of style? BORDEN’S ICE CREAM.

    56 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    :30 spot. Wanted to try something lighter.

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    Peer Feedback:

    wow hard to critique, because your sound is clear you are performing really well, maybe it's just ME but, again it feels that if this would be a longer (slower) commercial it would sound superb. Again it's on the button i just feel that it's too much copy or words for 30 sec.
    Maybe i'm wrong anyway james you are doing very well in my opinion
    All the best
    Refards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    With that rich, creamy, texture in your voice, who can resist... You skipped the emphasis, the first time the product was mentioned but overall excellent job. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    James you got a good voice and you know how to use it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys. Just had another couple of classes working with a couple of working professionals here in NYC. One voice talent and a casting director, in the booth working on commercials, promos and narrations. Just plugging away and trying to make progress.

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    New York, New York. I want to wake up in a city that never sleeps ......Just turned green with envy and for dark guy like me, it's difficult, let me tell you! LOL!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! Where do I get some ice cream, and how do I get the smile off my face? That is what I have been wanting to hear from you. I'm gonna listen to it again. Be Well.

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    Bottoms up

    Script:

    Just when you thought it was impossible for Bottoms Up to come up with another great promotion, they’ve gone and done it again! It’s now October Fest at Bottoms Up. Every weekend in October, Bottoms Up is gonna be serving german food specials, plus beer and schnapps specials. They’ll also have live music Wednesday through Saturday.

    That’s Bottoms Up, located at the independent boat yard.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mahoneybill's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice enthusiasm with the delivery of the read. Bottoms Up appreciates their customers with yet another deal. I'm ready to head out for a drink. Recording quality feels a bit hollow like I'm listening to this ad over the phone. Heard a paper shuffle during "independent boat yard."

    Peer Feedback:

    Great enthusiasm! Great pitch variation! I don't even drink beer, yet now I feel like I want one!!! I agree with Richard's comment above as it relates to the recording quality. Other than that, awesome read!

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    Bottoms Up

    Script:

    Just when you thought it was impossible for Bottoms Up to come up with another great promotion, they’ve gone and done it again! It’s now October Fest at Bottoms Up. Every weekend in October, Bottoms Up is gonna be serving german food specials, plus beer and schnapps specials. They’ll also have live music Wednesday through Saturday.

    That’s Bottoms Up, located at the independent boat yard.

    81 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear otto philips's recording

    First timer, but don't go easy on me! Let me know how it comes across to you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad :) Some mouth noise (another great) a slight breath before "Every weekend"

    I thought the delivery was pretty good for an audition.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love your courage: "Don't go easy on me!"

    Watch "boat yard." There was a glottal stop after boat, so it came out "bo' yard".

    I can hear the "real you" in this delivery. I can also hear your connection with the script; but, you need more smile. I think it will make a _huge_ difference in your read. Right now, it sounds like you're telling me this about Bottom's Up with disdain rather than admiration.

    Keep Going Strong!
    Steven

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    Brita Water Filter

    Script:

    This Holiday, we’d like to encourage excessive drinking. Water, of course. Incredibly clear, fresh water. It’s the gift you give with Brita, and a healthy alternative to the usual holiday spirits. So go ahead, indulge…it’s a good thing. Happy and Healthy Holidays.

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Michael King's recording

    Any feedback appreciated. I'm working on enunciation and sounding natural.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I especially like your delivery on "So, go ahead, indulge...it's a good thing." Just right.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep! I agree with Bill's comments, that's the part i enjoyed the most!

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    Budwieser

    Script:

    I'm just a regular guy who wants the same things everybody else wants, food, family, shelter, friends, and plenty of ice cold Budweiser. Just not necessarily in that order.

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This is my first posting! I wanted to do something fairly short and simple right off the bat and not bite off any more than I can chew. Baby steps. I have a pretty simple setup, so there may be some ambient room noise.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like the modulation on the last line.

    When you say "Budweiser," you hit the Buh sound. Instead of punching it, try playing with stretching it, or making it sound warm (as in friendly, nobody likes warm beer!)

    Also, I'm not sure what to suggest but maybe add a little more variety to the list? Its a very long list.

    Best of luck!

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    Cafe Vienne

    Script:

    Jenny and I don’t often get a chance to chat and go over things. She’s so very busy. That’s what I get for having such a bright and creative daughter! But, last Tuesday, she invited me out for coffee and we had such a wonderful time. We talked about old times, good friends -- and the coffee was great too. Cafe Vienna ... with that old-fashioned Viennese taste and delicious aroma. Just perfect for catching up and looking back. CAFE VIENNA ... good feelings ... that’s what life is all about.

    31 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any and all feedback appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality is excellent. Very nice read! I especially liked the tone shift when you bring up the memory (starting with "But, last Tuesday"). It delivers a new thought VERY well. The only thing I wish were a little better was the very last line. It seemed a little thrown away, especially for such an obvious tag line. It should bookend the read more, perhaps matching the tone of your first sentence, but at least with more emphasis than you currently are using. EXCELLENT read, though!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks much Mike. Appreciate your feedback! I need to work on these dang tag lines. Because I hit "good feelings" with such gusto, I wanted to back off a bit on the tag. Perhaps I should have hit "good feelings" slightly less and hit the end more. Just wanted to end on a gentle note because the read was kind of reflective. Once again . . . this is such a subjective thing! Thanks. Marianne

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    Len Goodman says 10!

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    Wow, Richurd. I've never watched the show, so I don't know what it means coming from Len Goodman, but coming from you . . . that's huge! Thank you. You are a most discerning judge!

    Peer Feedback:

    Marrianne getting my approval is no big deal but you got Brian's approval. Now that's saying something!

    Peer Feedback:

    If I tell him I can't stand Neil Diamond, do you think I can get a better critique???? Cause I really can't stand Neil Diamond.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. This one's a winner. Definately call-back material. Brian's fine tuning suggestions may have even gotten you the job. Good stuff.

    What's wrong with Neil Diamond? I grew up listening to him. Schmaltzy sometimes, yes. But if wasn't for him, there would have been no Monkees!

    Four Monkees songs are attributed to Neil Diamond. They are "I'm a Believer," "Lookout, Here Comes Tomorrow," "A Little Bit Me, A Little Bit You," and "Love to Love."

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Brian and James - really do appreciate all the great feedback. I feel guilty - like I should be sending money to someone for this feedback forum - learning so much!

    On the Neil Diamond front, sorry - don't mean to offend. Just not my style - what was the deal with his garb anyway???? I do appreciate the Monkees though!

    Peer Feedback:

    I have a lot of ND songs I really like, but he's a showman and does have a fairly schmaltzy sense of concerts....but the songs are nice listening. HATE the ET song he did, though!

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    "Turn On Your Heart Light"

    Yeah. Pop doesn't even begin to cover the description of that one.

    I palyed the heck out of the Hot August Night album. Early 70's.

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    California Almonds

    Script:

    California almonds are in! When you’re talking almonds and the topic is fat, the good news is that it’s mostly monounsaturated, like the kind you find in olive oil. In fact, almonds are low in saturated fat, high in vitamin E and cholesterol free. So now that you know the skinny on fat, make sure California Almonds are in.

    31 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any comments appreciated! Just trying out some commercial stuff.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice reading MH. You delivered the informative content in an easy going style which grabbed my interest. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    excellent read..great tones and pitch..flowed very nicely ..might want to try the de esser to keep the s sound from being so dominant..but other than that awesome..

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Arlen and Tye - thanks for your feedback. Yes, I do need to look into that darn de esser. Thanks!

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    Campbell's Ready to Serve Soups

    Script:

    Campbell's Ready To Serve

    You always knew Campbell’s was good. You just didn’t know how good! Introducing Campbell’s Ready to Serve Soups. Now, seven of your favorites, like Classic Chicken Noodle and Classic Tomato come ready to eat. Just microwave and eat. It’s that easy. Campbell’s. M'm M'm good.

    44 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Carl's recording

    Whatever you can offer as constructive feedback is what I'm looking for. Thanx.

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    Peer Feedback:

    your recording quality seems a bit sub par, but I absolutely love your voice for this type of read! You had it almost dead on! makes ME wanna try some soup...

    Peer Feedback:

    For the most part, I thought the read was good but I detect an accent Spanish on the word noodle and especially tomato.

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    Canadian Club

    Script:

    Your dad wasn't a metrosexual. He didn't do pilates, moisturize or drink pink cocktails. No your dad drank whiskey cocktails, made with Canadian Club served in a rocks glass. They tasted good. They were effortless. Canadian Club. Damn right your dad drank it.

    119 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gmura's recording

    Trying out something with a little grit (I think)... Looking for feedback on performance, recording, music, etc. All is welcome, and , as always, thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116549/script-recording-91940.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi gmura! I liked the script and think the background music is a good choice but have some suggestions:

    I think the background music is great yet a tad too slow. Nudge the speed up just a hair and you have it good.

    There's an emphasis on the first "dad" that I think needs to be minimized and put more emphasis on "metrosexual" instead like you're building a touch of sarcasm. Put the emphasis mainly on the 'metro' part instead and see how that sounds. The second sentence was spoken a little too fast and the word "moisturize" had no emphasis either, just sort of read over until you read "drink pink cocktails" in one whole phrase which I think the word "pink" would be another great word to emphasize like "metro" in the first sentence. The third sentence was fine. The sentence "They tasted good" starts off little flat and then the following sentence "They were effortless" was repeated in the exact same tone and spacing as the previous sentence and were squeezed quickly together. I think you could slow this sentence down a tad and put a slight pause between "were" and "effortless" to make the point that Canadian Club whiskey is a "man's drink" and doesn't need any fancy attention. "Canadian Club" sounds perfect. Then there's a much longer pause between that and the last sentence which I think you're trying to let the background music be the main influence but its a tiny bit too long in between.

    Those are my thoughts and humble suggestions. Overall I think its a good recording. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    JLeigh - all good points -thank you for your suggestions!!

    Peer Feedback:

    It's funny.. everything I wanted to say, the astute Jleigh already said..

    On that note when I listened I thought you were professional already. If you are not, you are right there on the cusp. Loved your voice, nice range and tone. This is a great spot for you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mahoneybill, thank you. I am not a professional VO (yet), but I do have years of acting/performing/singing to draw upon for my reads. Live performing is much different than a recorded performance though, and timing and inflection become exponentially more crucial in this environment where you have only seconds to make an impression. I very much appreciate this forum and people like yourself, JLeigh, jamesromak, and many others who give advice and encouragement to those of us just starting out. As a lifelong artist, I know that sometimes that one person clapping in the audience is all we need to keep going. I will be re-recording this spot with the suggestions listed above and saving it for possible use for demo. Cheers!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the read. Couple of observations - I think it's more difficult to not sound like you're reading when you add affectations like a more gritty voice, accent, etc. You're an actor, so this may not be an issue, but I'm hearing more "reading" than I'd like to. There's a lot of breath "pushed out" as you come to the end of most sentences as if your forcing something. Music choice is great - pacing seems fine. Recording quality sounded fine for me in my headphones.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Tom. I think the more I do these practice reads, the more relaxed I am becoming, but I've got a ways to go. I sure appreciate all the feedback - it is helping me immensely in developing some skills in VO and mic technique.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Voice! I thought the delivery was fine, especially if it's got visuals. The VO sounds a little on the trebly side to me this time.

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    Canadian Club

    Script:

    Your dad wasn't a metrosexual. He didn't do pilates, moisturize or drink pink cocktails. No your dad drank whiskey cocktails, made with Canadian Club served in a rocks glass. They tasted good. They were effortless. Canadian Club. Damn right your dad drank it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    I heard this earlier and thought I would try some of my own advice. I'm also checking out my own self directing (as opposed to self criticizing) and editing. Looking for feedback on maintaining a consistent flow after cutting and pasting...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-60166.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your tone, I think it fits well with the piece. I would pick up the pace and vary it up a bit from "No, your dad drank whiskey" through to "Canadian Club". Then you've got a little more room for oomph on that last line, which I think you've nailed.

    Recording quality sounds fine, though I'm listening through built-in output, so nothing glaring. Nice work.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this script. I read it before I listened to your take and I sort of heard a Sam Elliot type voice in my head, but I think your delivery works better. Nicely done!

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    Canadian Club

    Script:

    Your dad wasn't a metrosexual. He didn't do pilates, moisturize or drink pink cocktails. No your dad drank whiskey cocktails, made with Canadian Club served in a rocks glass. They tasted good. They were effortless. Canadian Club. Damn right your dad drank it.

    36 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Fire Away.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/CanadianClub-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    James. This felt to me as if you were reading because there was too much focus on the words rather than just talking to someone about his dad. The pacing seemed rigid and the tone somber.."...in a rocks glass" came out as "....in rocks glasses". Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Would have liked to have heard a little more "I'm masculine and to **** with you if you don't like it" in the tone. I think Jerry Lino did a great version of this one.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom - I'd interested to hear Jerry's. How far back is it? There's no way to do a search.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom. I see what you mean. I did this one late last night before going to bed. Only did 3 or 4 takes and probably didn't put as much thought and effort into it as I should have.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, I heard distain for those who were not like your dad who drank the Canadian Club.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would have to agree...there wasn't enough of a personal connection with the copy and or your chosen audience.
    lovely voice but work on losing the announcer quality and connect
    try the classic actor's exercise: who, what, when, where, why, and how are you communicating with and about.

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    4 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    TxTom recorded this one earlier and I loved it. Wanted to take a whack at it. Any comments?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-21717.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good job. Great attitude and tone. I liked it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ya wacked it pretty danged good, Jerry!

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    Canadian Club

    Script:

    Your dad wasn't a metrosexual.He didn't do pilates,moisturize or drink pink cocktails. No your dad drank whiskey cocktails,made with Canadian Club served in a rocks glass. They tasted good. They were effortless. Canadian Club. Damn right your dad drank it.

    Script from Edge Studio's 4,672 Practice Script Library >
    English Adult > Commercial > Food & Beverage

    14 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    New to this site, I am. Here's my take on the Canadian Club script. This scipt seemed to want to be delivered with attitude, so I've given it a not-so-subtle subtext of "Man up!" Perhaps too in-your-face? Let me know what you think.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-53623/script-recording-55019.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sundance--it was over-the-top for my taste. Try delivering the second sentence with less of a sneer and more of a grumpy old man/Clint Eastwood attitude. Overall I'd just tone down the attitude a notch or two...that's my two cents, anyway.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would agree...your read went from angry to whiny, I would suggest using a little more lighthearted tongue in cheek humor.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it. Yeah, in your face but hell, it's CC for God's sake.

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    Captain Morgan Rum

    Script:

    Captain Morgan Private Stock has all the charm and discipline of an aristocrat, with the brass of a seafaring rouge. Crafted from the Captain's oldest and finest Puerto Rican rums, distilled from pure cane sugar molasses, then blended with refined island spices. The result is an exceptionally well-mannered spirit that doesn't forget where it comes from. A rum brash enough to bunker down in a Bahama Mama, yet distinguished enough to be sipped over ice. Captain Morgan. An officer and a gentleman.

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Trying to give a taste of my dynamic range and still stay in character for the read... David Michaelson

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    Peer Feedback:

    David --
    great voice. I like this one.
    lots of fun and energy, and I get the variation that you're putting in different parts of the read.
    only suggestion I have is to tighten up the editing a little. seems like there's 1 extra beat between phrases...

    great job.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm just gonna bet lazy and follow all of Dave's critiques so he can tell me what to say. ;) Seriously, fun work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, great voice! Loved your inflections. Cheers.

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    Captain Morgan Rum

    Script:

    Captain Morgan Private Stock has all the charm and discipline of an aristocrat, with the brass of a seafaring rogue. Crafted from the Captain’s oldest and finest Puerto Rican rums, distilled from pure cane sugar molasses, then blended with refined island spices. The result is an exceptionally well-mannered spirit that doesn’t forget where it comes from. A rum brash enough to bunker down in a Bahama Mama, yet distinguished enough to be sipped over ice. Captain Morgan. An officer and a gentleman.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Peter's recording

    I'm aiming for 'sexy pirate'. Not easy to get right but what do you think?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Captain Morgan.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    What do I think? Captain Morgan is swill, but you have a very nice piece here.
    You know where you made errors, which you caught and didn't correct.
    Your "cool," as we say, faded, and energy was lost at the end. But this is your thing!Americans, as you will hear in the forum, want more 'gush.' This is a battle I fight
    constantly, when my literate, confidential pieces are knocked for lacking "emotion."
    Do it again. It will turn out well!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your response Henry. Great to have your support. I agree with what you say. I did lose it. I was also imagining a raised eyebrow and, 'dry, deadpan'. It's the getting into character and then keeping the momentum which is so hard for a 'rookie' like me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dry wit is lost on the crowd. Glad to help!

    Peer Feedback:

    I haven't seen a captain morgan commercial with a "sexy pirate" side to it. They are usually witty and fun marketed towards the 20-35 yr old crowd. Stay in that market and you'll have greater success.

    Peer Feedback:

    Of course, it's brain drain to play to the 20-year old. Your piece got too gentle,
    for gentlemen. For a pirate, give it swagger!

    Peer Feedback:

    My my my Henry! Did I see you using the word SWAGGER?? WOW Henry you are going back to your 17's but in 2012! Great!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry Peter, Henry blinded me there with his Swagger! heheh
    You know what Peter? I would love to see how you sound if you read the script...you being a pirate, talking about another pirate!
    I think it would be fun and fresh.......what do you say? could we possibly hear that from you??
    You have a great voice! Look forward to your recording!

    Peer Feedback:

    Whether or not you would get booked by Captain Morgan based on this "sexy pirate" audition is kind of beside the point. You show great vocal control and copy interpretation skills here, Peter. (I regret passing this over before.) Your close proximity and low volume makes every little nuance come through, and I heard some very effective interpretive nuances in this read. You've definitely got my attention...and, dare I say, before long, you'll be attracting a lot more attention with performances like this. Nice job.

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    Captain Morgan

    Script:

    Captain Morgan Private Stock has all the charm and discipline of an aristocrat, with the brass of a seafaring rogue. Crafted from the Captain’s oldest and finest Puerto Rican rums, distilled from pure cane sugar molasses, then blended with refined island spices. The result is an exceptionally well-mannered spirit that doesn’t forget where it comes from. A rum brash enough to bunker down in a Bahama Mama, yet distinguished enough to be sipped over ice. Captain Morgan. An officer and a gentleman.

    25 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dhickie's recording

    Still trying to figure out the processing of audio files. Fun to do a recording like this when you know and like the product.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7944/script-recording-27539.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I can visualize the Coors Light guy speaking when I listen to your delivery, in which case I'd say mission accomplished. Although I can't put my finger on it, there is something about your voice pitch or annunciation that seems off to me at the end of your sentences.

    All and all a solid performance!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi dhickie,
    The read was uneven. It's as though you didn't come to life until the second sentence and then perhaps a little too alive. I might suggest balancing out the read. The modulation was welcome but overdone. You might want to be a little more even toned and bring out the highlights with inflection as opposed to modulation. The last sentence was the best for me.

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds like you are both onto something but I don't have enough experience to understand exactly what you mean. Am I being too theatrical? I've done a lot of acting over the years and probably can't help it. Thanks, Dave

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi dhickie,
    Since you ask I'll try to break it down for clarity sake.

    The first sentence was somewhat flat with introduction of a little characterization on aristocrat.

    Enter the pirate.The second sentence introduces a seemingly different character. . Subsequent sentences seem to go in and out of the pirate character. For example:
    You lose the pirate and go back to the character of the first sentence with - "then blended with refined island spices. The result is an exceptionally well-mannered spirit"
    Back to the pirate: "that doesn’t forget where it comes from."

    By now you should get the idea.

    What you want in a read like this is consistency. One believable character that is going to sell the product. We need to buy into the character before we buy the product. Hope this helps. Ciao

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, I understand now. I recorded it that way on purpose. I figured that since the rum is described as having 2 'personalities', then I should also. But you are saying that it works better when you just stay with one. Aye!

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    Cargill

    Script:

    In Italy, you'll find Florence. In this case, Florence is a cow. And it’s important, because Italian cheesemakers want it to make the best parmesan, and more of it. Knowing that cows fed certain feeds produced higher yields of parmesan, Cargill developed special feeds and a supply chain, so the cheesemakers get just the right milk. Now, Florence the cow delivers lots of quality parmesan to Florence, the city. This is how Cargill works with customers.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any and all feedback appreciated! Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53785.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this sounds great! I think you've done a great job bringing in the humor and irony between Florence the cow and Florence the city.

    My ONLY small nit-pick is that I think there should be a TAD more space before the very last sentence. (But others may disagree, so take that with a grain of salt!)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Bquesada - thanks so much for your input! Very much appreciated. I know what you mean about the last sentence - I was trying to keep this in at 30 seconds, but perhaps I could have had just a slightly longer pause.

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    Carnation Instant Breakfast

    Script:

    Every 24 hours, you get a whole new chance to take on the world. Get yourself ready with Carnation Instant Breakfast. With 21 vitamins and minerals and the energy you need to rise and shine all day. Carnation Instant Breakfast from Nestle. Great days start here.

    8 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Trying to mix conversational with selling. Seeing if the inflections match with the product and content...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-60155.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    hankradio --
    this sounds great. really nice job.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    Chateau de Pique :60

    Script:

    Chateau de Pique :60

    Tucked into the rolling farmlands of Seymour, Indiana, Chateau de Pique Winery is housed in a quaint 19th century horse barn and stands among 80 acres of beautiful, rustic countryside. Stop in and sample the many unique wines or hand crafted beers that Chateau de Pique offers. While you’re there, be sure to book your next corporate event, holiday party or special event and let Chateau de Pique help you create cherished memories that you, your family and your friends will never forget.

    On August 7, Rusty Bladen from Madison will be performing during the monthly “Wine Down Wednesday”, with food and drink specials throughout the night.

    Chateau de Pique is open Monday-Thursday 11to 6, Friday and Saturday 11-7, Sunday noon to 6 with extended hours the first Wednesday of each month for “Wine Down Wednesday”. For more information or to book your special event, call 812-522-9296. That’s 812-522-9296.

    39 people have played this

    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear BradStaggs's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83242/script-recording-64814.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Brad is this the same as the first recording? I don't hear much difference! (if any)

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    Chateau de Pique :60

    Script:

    Chateau de Pique :60

    Tucked into the rolling farmlands of Seymour, Indiana, Chateau de Pique Winery is housed in a quaint 19th century horse barn and stands among 80 acres of beautiful, rustic countryside. Stop in and sample the many unique wines or hand crafted beers that Chateau de Pique offers. While you’re there, be sure to book your next corporate event, holiday party or special event and let Chateau de Pique help you create cherished memories that you, your family and your friends will never forget.

    On August 7, Rusty Bladen from Madison will be performing during the monthly “Wine Down Wednesday”, with food and drink specials throughout the night.

    Chateau de Pique is open Monday-Thursday 11to 6, Friday and Saturday 11-7, Sunday noon to 6 with extended hours the first Wednesday of each month for “Wine Down Wednesday”. For more information or to book your special event, call 812-522-9296. That’s 812-522-9296.

    133 people have played this

    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear BradStaggs's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83242/script-recording-64814.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Brad
    Overall nice job. I liked your pacing. GREAT job nailing the :60!!!!!!
    It seems like a lot of copy for :60 so it feels a bit rushed but you came in right on time!!!!!
    Seemed natural to me and diction was clear!!!!
    Good job.
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Three posts of the same thing? I heard the exact same thing in the three posts and stopped. Not conversational.

    Peer Feedback:

    FYI - If indeed you posted the same recording three times and want to delete two of them:

    Click on your name - it will take you to your Feedback Forum Participation page
    Click on "Recordings" - That will take you to a listing of your posted recordings where you can edit or delete.
    Click "delete" and confirm.

    It is confusing to know if you have posted your recording because after you hit "submit", the website comes up as "null". It's a glitch that is supposed to be corrected with the soon to be revamped website.

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    Chateau de Pique :60

    Script:

    Chateau de Pique :60

    Tucked into the rolling farmlands of Seymour, Indiana, Chateau de Pique Winery is housed in a quaint 19th century horse barn and stands among 80 acres of beautiful, rustic countryside. Stop in and sample the many unique wines or hand crafted beers that Chateau de Pique offers. While you’re there, be sure to book your next corporate event, holiday party or special event and let Chateau de Pique help you create cherished memories that you, your family and your friends will never forget.

    On August 7, Rusty Bladen from Madison will be performing during the monthly “Wine Down Wednesday”, with food and drink specials throughout the night.

    Chateau de Pique is open Monday-Thursday 11to 6, Friday and Saturday 11-7, Sunday noon to 6 with extended hours the first Wednesday of each month for “Wine Down Wednesday”. For more information or to book your special event, call 812-522-9296. That’s 812-522-9296.

    22 people have played this

    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear BradStaggs's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83242/script-recording-64814.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Brad -

    Your recording has a lot of static - on both posts - which puts a damper on the sound quality and clarity of your read. It sounds a bit rushed, but overall, the technique and interpretation sound okay. If you used this for a paid audition, it probably didn't make the cut due to recording quality.

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    Chateau de Pique :60

    Script:

    Chateau de Pique :60

    Tucked into the rolling farmlands of Seymour, Indiana, Chateau de Pique Winery is housed in a quaint 19th century horse barn and stands among 80 acres of beautiful, rustic countryside. Stop in and sample the many unique wines or hand crafted beers that Chateau de Pique offers. While you’re there, be sure to book your next corporate event, holiday party or special event and let Chateau de Pique help you create cherished memories that you, your family and your friends will never forget.

    On August 7, Rusty Bladen from Madison will be performing during the monthly “Wine Down Wednesday”, with food and drink specials throughout the night.

    Chateau de Pique is open Monday-Thursday 11to 6, Friday and Saturday 11-7, Sunday noon to 6 with extended hours the first Wednesday of each month for “Wine Down Wednesday”. For more information or to book your special event, call 812-522-9296. That’s 812-522-9296.

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    As Kristin Price stated in her feedback to Brad, "OH! I just saw that it's supposed to be a :60 commercial. OK. Well, in that case it's an over-written spot, and you'll just need to try to sound relaxed while going fast. A tough assignment, but there are tricks to make it happen!" So, I took it on as a challenge. I didn't want to spend a whole lot of time on it - just two takes pieced together.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/ChateauDePique-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    James, your voice and styling are excellent; I really enjoyed this recording. I think you rose to the challenge of making this sound conversational and relaxed in a short amount of time. Your inflections are quite good also. Nicely done

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Trying to make this pizza sound delicious...

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    Peer Feedback:

    hankradio --
    really like the voice. the pace during the pizza ingredients list seems too slow. I don't think slower-ness equates to deliciousness... I think you could make the pizza delicious with inflection and maybe imply mouth-watering deliciousness with a little wetter sounding mouth -- just guessing on that one.
    the opening and the closing was great.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    86 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Thanks in advance for any and all comments.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-89859.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read! Nice pacing, casual tone, good-sounding recording. I have nothing but good things to say!

    Peer Feedback:

    Terrific warm sound. Great recording.

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    wow

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow indeed. Great voice - warm, easy to listen to, and delivers message perfectly. Makes me want to head to Starbucks. Great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Absolutely wow. Sounds fantastic.

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    61 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Any and all feedback welcomed and appreciated. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3696/script-recording-89646.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is fairly good.
    Performance for me is outstanding with the pauses, pace, tone and passion.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear angelawilliams01's recording

    This is my demo reel. I recorded it in a professional studio and was hoping to get some feedback. Thank you for all your advice and help in advance! I am fairly new to the voice over world. : )

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3614/script-recording-63066.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, I only meant to receive feedback on the performance. Thank you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Why did you have someone else introduce your demo? And in such a way it’s hard to understand his pronunciation. I wouldn’t be able to spell your name correctly based on that intro.

    You pronounced “tomato” as “toma’o” as the appostrophy is a glottal stop. And that’s in your first sample. That would likely get your demo stopped right there. I don’t care if you pronounce it “to-may-toe” or “to-mah-toe”, you’d better get both “t’s” in there. The attitude in the first sample is nice. Sassy without going over the top.

    I didn’t feel a good connection to the script in the second sample. I get the tone you’re going for, but I didn’t feel that you hit the mark on that one.

    Third sample (the coy sarcasm of the game commercial) ran a little long. It could be a little more sultry to sell the attitude (and hide the punch line) a little more IMO.

    The country bumpkin delivery was cute and funny, but as a southerner, I have to say that I had to listen a few times to get “indy films” out of that read. Sounds like “andy films” and that left me wondering “what in the world is she talking about?” The music bed level didn’t help there...masks a lot of your delivery. You just WHAT art house directors?? Crave? Really hard to hear and decipher. Diction, even in a lazy dialogue, is important. Authenticity sometimes has to give way to understandability for the sake of delivering a usable (and sellable) product.

    The final sample sounds too chipper (IMO) for the somber “heroic grand-father who died in the war” kind of spot. You can still sound proud — and yet sad or having that feeling of loss of a relative — without sounding maudlin. You sounded happy in this spot. It’s fine to be proud, but to me, this section should have a respectful tone that conveys your pride in your grandfather who made the ultimate sacrifice for your/our freedom.

    Overall, I would suggest working on diction a bit. The glottal stop in the first selection would have likely killed your chances the second slice would even get to the speakers. I didn’t hear a great deal of variety in delivery beyond doing a LITTLE coyness in the game spot and then a hillbilly delivery in the next.

    Whoever is doing your production needs to balance your voice against the background more satisfactorily as well. I know you wanted the performance critiqued, but that issue makes some of your performance hard to decipher. If they’re doing your next demo, consider that. Audibly, this reel is not as good as it should be. You state you’re new to the industry. Be very careful putting out a demo too quickly. It can haunt you by putting off directors who might remember a less-than-impressive demo and write you off if you submit another.

    Lastly: a demo shouldn't run more than 1:10-ish. The samples ran a bit long for a commercial reel.

    Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi TxTom,

    Thank you for the feedback. I appreciate the help.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tomato soup: Fun sexy! Love it.
    Kids: Nice change to a little sarcastic, but likable. Genuine amusement. I like the pacing and flow.
    virtual fighter: Another voice (great). Love the humor. Funny production.
    southern: A bit hard to follow a couple of spots in this one. Love the voice, though, and the humor. I think the words are unexpected so I need my hand held a touch more. I had to read Tom's review to get "indie films".
    camera: I like the voice and change to this tone, which really worked for me. The hesitations didn't read to me as quite authentic, but I hear that same thing in all kinds of "real person" spots.

    I loved your different voices and the variety! So much humor, too, which is always a bonus.

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback Tonia. It gives me something to build off of. Appreciate it! : )

    Peer Feedback:

    My first questions would be - Did you have this produced in a studio that produces voice-over on a regular basis? Or was it a music house that does VO on the side? To paraphrase and old axiom, "A studio is not a studio is not a studio." What's good for music production is not necessarily what's good for VO.

    If you listen to some demos on Voicebank.net, it is a common practice for the VO artist to be slated by another voice, often of the opposite sex. It's often done by someone from the agency representing the talent. My preference is not to have the slate unless the agency wants or needs it. But I see nothing "wrong" with it. However, it may distract or detract from you if you are sending the demo to a potential client who knows who you are from your solicitation and if your file is labeled properly, i.e. "I already know who you are. Who is this strange guy and why is he telling me what I already know?" And the first few seconds of your demo gets lost to that thought process.

    Tomato Soup - The attitude and style is fine. Pick up the pace. At 19 seconds, it's too long. You can clip off 3 if you energize it a bit more. That little hitch (or break) in your voice on the second "tomato" causes the word to get a little truncated or abbreviated. It is the product and the word should be fully formed.

    Animal - Again, pacing. Forget the commas. Plow through the list to get to the point of animals just being animals. I take it this is a spot for a zoo?

    Video Game? - I didn't get a clear read on what the game title was (something about a spider?). I'm not sure that the attitude matched the intent. I was thinking either sexier (to play against type) or tomboy-ish (to play into type). This just seemed kind of girly to me. But if you're going to go with that (a perfectly valid choice), really go for it.

    Indie Films - I got "Indie Films". I think the reason others didn't is because you dropped down so much in inflection and volume on "films" that it was hard to tell what you were saying. Give it equal weight and emphasis. The idea of a well spoken hillbilly being really into independent films and that art form is a really interesting take on this bit. Just make sure the accent doesn't obliterate the words. Especially when you're yelling at your kid. And really yell!

    Photo - Again, pacing. Pick it up a touch at the beginning to contrast with the slower, seriousness of your delivery at the end which, for my money, was spot on. Maybe a little sappy, but why not.

    If you pace things out a little differently, you will reach that sweet spot of 1:10 - 1:15 for the demo and make it more listenable. Tom's comment about balancing the production (voice, music and FX) is also something to consider. Another question I would have is - Who, besides yourself and the person recording the session, was assisting and/or directing you? Another set of objective ears, someone who knows something about VO, like a coach, may be valuable in helping you putting it together.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're welcome. :)

    Gotta pipe up again and say I so agree about picking up the pace, especially in the tomato soup ad. There's definitely room to tighten things up without losing the playfulness, timing et cetera.

    Best of luck!

    Tonia

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    Cool Southern Cafe

    Script:

    At Fats Cafe, we know you don’t have a ton of time for lunch. But we also know you shouldn’t just inhale your lunch at your desk while working on your latest project or breaking your record at Candy Crush..
    So go out and have real lunch... a plate of some southern-inspired goodness at Fats Cafe.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear ScottMcFall's recording

    From the audition: Type of Project: Our client is looking for a 20-something sounding male with a cool southern slang-accent to be the voice in their online ads for a cool, hip new lunch cafe. Artistic Direction: We would like you to have a slight modern southern accent/ slang, not too country or redneck. Smart, witty, upbeat and charming. Very engaging and able to ad lib a bit if possible.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback scottphipps! It's appreciated!

    Yeah, there was a line in the direction that says "...ad lib if possible." so some of the parts that didn't come out of my mouth easily using the accent, I ad libbed to make something else a little easier to say.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your accent was done well. Working on your "latest project" sounds boring, but it's suppose to sound boring so good job. I bring that up because the "Candy Crush" should not sound boring. I agree with Scott when he said you could have "hit Candy Crush better." Have fun with it because we all know of a time where we got sucked into the world of Candy Crush and lost all track of time. Recording was great and both endings sounded very good to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did the requested accent very well.

    You did change the first line slightly by saying "a bunch" instead of 'a ton'.

    I think you could have hit 'Candy Crush' better, just to highlight the humor of the line.

    I liked both of the last sentence examples.

    Peer Feedback:

    Almost, but not quite.

    Think Larry the Cable Guy or Jeff Foxworthy.

    It also needs a little "attitude" and sarcasm.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ummm...is this from a job you're currently auditioning for? If so, posting the script might be against the rules with the company/agency which provided the opportunity. Just something of which to be aware. A lot of auditions are non-disclosure items until after publication or airing.

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    Cracker Barrel Old Country Store

    Script:

    HERE AT CRACKER BARREL OLD COUNTRY STORES, IT'S ALWAYS BEEN ABOUT PLEASIN PEOPLE.
    WE'RE KNOWN FOR DOIN STUFF.....DIFFERENT LIKE.
    EVERY CRACKER BARREL STORE OFFERS HOMESTYLE COOKIN....MADE FROM SCRATCH...RIGHT HERE IN OUR OWN KITCHENS.
    YOU'LL FIND SOME EXCITIN NEW ITEMS AND PLENTY OF THE OLD FAVORITES I JUST KNOW YOU'RE GONNA LOVE....
    AND THEY'RE ALL MADE WITH THE QUALITY INGREDIENTS YOU'D BE EXPECTIN FROM CRACKER BARREL.
    AN DONTCHA FORGET BOUT OUR RETAIL STORE, WHERE YOU'RE GONNA FIND LOTSA NICE GIFTS N STUFF...PLENTY OF WARM "HOWDYS"...
    AN SOME DURN GOOD BUYS TOO,
    SO STOP IN TO A CRACKER BARREL OLD COUNTRY STORE NEAR YOU FOR SOME GOOD SHOPPIN AN A GREAT MEAL.
    I GARUNTEE YA....YA AIN'T LEAVIN HUNGRY!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Crosier's recording

    Something different for me...let me know what you think.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Dave -

    Great interp!!! Love the country style! Nice music bed. I'd hire ya!

    Something about the EQ ... needs to be warmer. Filter out the highs somehow I think. But otherwise, nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    One more thing... the music bed doesn't land right at the end.

    "Ya ain't leavin' hungry" bom BOM

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dave
    Great read. You seemed to have that real down home feeling in your voice.
    Kinda like Tom Bodett from Motel 6. We'll leave the light on for Ya.
    Well keep on voicing.

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    Cracker Barrel Old Country Stores

    Script:

    HERE AT CRACKER BARREL OLD COUNTRY STORES, IT'S ALWAYS BEEN ABOUT PLEASIN PEOPLE.
    WE'RE KNOWN FOR DOIN STUFF.....DIFFERENT LIKE.
    EVERY CRACKER BARREL STORE OFFERS HOMESTYLE COOKIN....MADE FROM SCRATCH...RIGHT HERE IN OUR OWN KITCHENS.
    YOU'LL FIND SOME EXCITIN NEW ITEMS AND PLENTY OF THE OLD FAVORITES I JUST KNOW YOU'RE GONNA LOVE....
    AND THEY'RE ALL MADE WITH THE QUALITY INGREDIENTS YOU'D BE EXPECTIN FROM CRACKER BARREL.
    AN DONTCHA FORGET BOUT OUR RETAIL STORE, WHERE YOU'RE GONNA FIND LOTSA NICE GIFTS N STUFF...PLENTY OF WARM "HOWDYS"...
    AN SOME DURN GOOD BUYS TOO,
    SO STOP IN TO A CRACKER BARREL OLD COUNTRY STORE NEAR YOU FOR SOME GOOD SHOPPIN AN A GREAT MEAL.
    I GARUNTEE YA....YA AIN'T LEAVIN HUNGRY!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This one was a mouthful. I did 2 takes, slightly different. I assumed this was a 30 second radio spot. I just made it in at 30 on both takes.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/CrackerBarrel-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I do you believe you nailed it! Great job--both takes.

    Peer Feedback:

    it sounds rushed to me, if its a 30 sec radio spot the listener has to focus big time.
    otherwise not bad.
    Regards
    Balaazs

    Peer Feedback:

    I know what you mean, Balazs. It's a lot of words to fit into :30. I have been listening to a lot of :30 radio spots with a lot of text and they go at quite a clip. It was not easy to try to make the product clear and get all of the information in as well. I tried to make this guy one of those fast-talking Southern Good 'ol Boy Gents. But I also needed to be articulate enough to make all of the points. It really exercised my mouth muscles.

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    Crystal Light Pink Lemonade

    Script:

    Because water is boring and you’re not. Drinking more of that wonderful stuff called water? Wake it up with Crystal Light Tangy Pink Lemonade today. Luscious Peach Iced Tea tomorrow. All the water you need. All the taste you want. Always 5 calories a glass. Never, ever, dull.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rdj515's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Th room sounds very open, a bit slow for what seems the pace of the commercial would go.Your voice was good!

    Peer Feedback:

    Lots of potential in your voice! The sound quality is poor but can easily be managed through acoustic treatments and mic placement. The read sounds like you are learning it and reading it at the same time. Take the time to learn the material (not memorize it) so it flows better. You need to pick up the pace by 1/2 at least to give it a more natural flow to the ear, right now its at the pace of a lullaby lol. Don't worry about the time being thirty secs since there would be images or music if this was a thirty. My thoughts are this would be a 15 , with images or another actor on camera ("Mom, can I have a glass!") doing something to fill the rest of the time for a 30.

    The voice is nice tho. Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    As mentioned above - I hear a lot of potential. The pacing was too slow. Your read should mimic your excitement for the product - think about how you would tell a friend about this great new lemonade you've discovered. You'd probably speak quickly - barely able to maintain your excitement. That's an exaggeration, but you get the idea. You have a nice smile to your voice, which comes across and adds the appropriate joy to the piece. I'd try reading it like your speaking to a friend who is sitting across the table from you. I'll bet that the read will come across more natural-sounding. Keep it up - I look forward to hearing more.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jarezzo's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality: I can hear reverb and white noise in the recording (the less of those you have, the better). You may need to buy a new microphone and get into a closet or under a heavy blanket while you record.

    Performance: It was okay, but it needs to be more "conversational" instead of "commercial"; I could hear the "affected" voice on your first sentence. The listing was ok: the "flavor" of each word was nice, but I think they need just a bit more emphasis.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree - decent read, but it should be more conversational, more natural. Just talking to a friend. That'd make it more appealing. But I like your voice - very nice to listen to.

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    Dannon Yogurt

    Script:

    If you were any more satisfied, you’d blush. New Dannon Light ‘N Fit Creamy. So light, fit and deliciously creamy, there’s total satisfaction in every bite. Dannon Light ‘N Fit Creamy. You know what you want, why compromise?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LJDaniels's recording

    I have been working on my recording space and hope that I haven't picked up much noise. I have also been working on reducing my mouth noise and harsh Ts. Also, performance wise, I am trying to work on my timing. I get too speedy. And I have trouble not sounding too upbeat and perky when I am going for a little husky or sensual. Finally, if you would suggest the adjectives for my voice I would love to hear the input.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The first thing to ask is: "Who is my intended audience?"

    If it's a guy that you're trying to con into eating Dannon Light ‘N Fit Creamy so he'll get 6-pack abs, maybe husky and sensual will work. But he'd probably prefer a protein shake instead.

    But if you're talking to your girlfriend who is conscious about watching her figure? Not so sure that that approach really works. Do women talk to women that way? Maybe about chocolate, but yogurt?

    Also - Others may disagree, but I'm not a big fan of little laughs in commercial copy. And I have had that confirmed by agents and casting directors. It sounds like you're either making fun of the product or acting superior to the listener. I actually heard a casting director say. "Don't ever laugh - unless it's written into the script as a direction."

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, James! I didn't even think of the audience.... DUH!!! I read "satisfied" and just went with sexy. Your input is so helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Think about the first sentence, since you took your initial clue from that one word. Then think about what the product is. Guilty pleasures of something that tastes so good but satisfies your hunger and your diet (or that girlfriend). Why would you blush?

    I kind of see a lot of that embarrassed, guilty pleasure smile or wink and a little shoulder shrug on the last line - like, "Isn't it obvious?"

    This is a pretty well written piece of copy, the words conjure up feelings of contentment and taste sensations. And its structure is really tight. So use sense memory to guide you. If you don't particularly like yogurt, substitute ice cream, chocolate or a nice juicy steak. To paraphrase "Field of Dreams", "If you taste it, the vocal inflection will come."

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    Dentyne Ice (15s)

    Script:

    Dentyne Ice. Intensely cold. For icy fresh breath that lasts and lasts. Dentyne Ice. Nothing's colder than ice.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KDaviesVoiceover's recording

    Sooooo.... didn't really know what to do with this little script except that it was full of the word "ICE." So, I turned up the aircon until it was cold (I live in the tropics so it was no easy task), washed my face with ice water and then recorded about 10 takes of the basically the same thing. For this mix I waited until the 4th beat to bring in the voice and tried to create some symmetry on the outro with 4 beats as well. (Too long?) Went for the hard sell / Semi-aggressive / Colder tone on this one. Let me know what you think!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice production.

    I wonder, though, if the reverb is necessary. I don't ever recall a commercial like this containing a lot of reverb, if at all. It puts you further away - more distant - from the product, if that makes sense.

    The commercials for Dentyne Ice tend to go more for the sex appeal - fresh breath and all that. I mean, "lasts and lasts". Who wouldn't want to?

    Here are a few examples of 15 second spots:

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Yv2YzSmin5Q

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MSs-ZeRGNtE

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9zd6Eg9llAc

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with jamesromick. You don't need that reverb on your voice. Nice otherwise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks again guys. Yeah reverb was very heavy on this one. It sounds like I am farther away from the listener I suppose. Unfortunately I saved the project AFTER I added it so... I guess I'll record it again!

    Now if I could only get that sexier tone, I'd probably get into Adult V.O work :P

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done. I agree with the above comments and maybe move just a little closer to the mic on the last tag to get your sexy back. And maybe just slightly hiss that "ice"?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear franm's recording

    I have a new mic, the Samson CO1U (do not yet own a mic stand). Also, I used Garage Band as my recording software. Recorded in my basement. Would love any and all feedback, especially on my mic placement. Also would love any hints about how to edit out the "empty noise" at the end of the recording. Thank you very much

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like the read and the tempo but there is hissing and sound coming from one speaker only. It also sounds as if you should be closer to the mic, sounds like you are too far away. Just a suggestion, you may want to try Audacity, I have had great results.

    Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your emotion, pacing and clarity but think you hit "Diet" too hard at the end. The mic technique (distance/angle) sounded good to me. The remove parts of the sound clip in Garageband, just point, click and hold on the head or tail of the clip and drag the pointer in the direction you want to trim. It's non-destructive, so you can always reverse this if you trim too much.

    Peer Feedback:

    I generally like the interpretation. Might like to see a little more confidence in the overall delivery, as if you're sending the "don't hold back" message throughout the whole read. I liked your pacing and clarity.

    As far as recording quality, the voice was in the left channel only. Adjust the pan on the track so that it is centered up. You have a nice, present sound on the mic so I think distance is good. For audio cleanup, consider a program like Audition. It will be able to easily remove the space at the beginning and end of your track. It also has functionality like noise reduction that can capture ambient noise (at a recorded point where you're not speaking) and then remove only those frequencies.

    Hope this helps.

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    Does he make you wana drink? In a good way?

    Script:

    Gran Patrón es el tequila platino más fino del mundo. Con un proceso de triple destilación y luego añejamiento hasta lograr la perfección, Cada botella de Gran Patrón es una obra de arte de cristal hecha a mano

    Es el tequila plateado preferido por los verdaderos conocedores.

    23 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear RTX's recording

    I am bilingual (English/Spanish) and rarely get to practice my Spanish in daily life here. Thought I'd try a quick one with Patron tequila while my other submissions have been in English.

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    Peer Feedback:

    It doesn't sound hurried to my ears. I'm not a spanish speaker but when i hear it, it always sounds fast. NICE

    Peer Feedback:

    That was smooth! You might try and up the gain on the voice just a tad, bring it to the front a little more. I'm bi-lingual English/Spanish and it sounded right on to me. I liked the music bed too, a bit of steel band vice the worn out mariachi... Well done.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drmusic99's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi drmusic99,
    Welcome to the board. You have pleasant sounding voice which lends itself nicely to the script you selected. I took note that you were willing to express yourself beyond the range of a monotone delivery which is important. Though not applied in the most effective manner. This isn't a great read but that's what this board is all about. As you progress you will get feedback as to what doesn't work and praise for what does. The what doesn't work feedback is more important. It tells you not to go there. If you follow that advice you will start knowing what works. It's what I call the "sweet spot". You then start hitting that "spot" more consistantly you'll begin to intuitively know how to read and deliver an effective recording. Ciao

    Peer Feedback:

    Try to make the read a little happier… Make me want to go out them bison Dunkin' Donuts Or Muffins. Pretend it was the best thing you have ever eaten in your life.

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    Dunkin Donuts

    Script:

    Introducing Dunkin Donuts all new freshly baked muffins. They’re incredibly delicious, and bigger than ever before. You’ll love them for a long, long time. Of course, nothing lasts forever. Bigger muffins, bigger taste new from Dunkin Donuts. Stop in today and try Dunkin Donuts' new bigger muffins with a cup of delicious coffee.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    In honor of National Donut Day... except it's about muffins. :) Still working on sounding casual. Happy to have the feedback. Thanks! ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Dunkin Donuts.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read was a little flat. I would have to see more energy in the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! I was about to say the same but I love your voice. Best.

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    Energy Fuel

    Script:

    How did we come up with the first energy drink for women? Nothing to it. No calories. No fat. No carbs. No sugar. Finally, there's a drink that zeros in on just the kind of energy a woman needs. New Energy Fuel. No calories, fat carbs or sugar means it's full of energy but free of guilt. So no matter how hectic your days get, there's a refreshing way to put the positive energy back into your life. Fill your life with positive energy. New Energy Fuel.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear acooklubo's recording

    Hi, it's only my 2nd time recording something so I really need help to know if the recording quality and room treatment sound ok. I had trouble with the volume of the first recording I made. Everything sounded fine when played back through my headphones connected to my interface, however when I uploaded to the script contest you could not even hear it. I hope I don't have the same issue with this one, any feedback on recording quality or performance will be greatly appreciated! Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your audio quality sounds perfect on my end as I can hear your voice fine.

    Immediately I noticed the inconsistent pauses between sentences early on as you listed lack of caloric requirements early on. Other than that your recording sounds great. Someone else obviously includes more advanced commentary but nothing negative stood out after repeated listens.

    Peer Feedback:

    If I were listening with my now permanently broken AKG-K240 headphones, I would say that your sound is a tad sibilant. Listening now through some Sony headphones, I still feel that you're bordering on sibilance. If you're emphasizing the upper range through EQ, I would advise against it. If you are NOT EQ'ing the upper frequencies, I would advise to bring them down ever so slightly. The recording space leaves absolutely nothing to be desired. I hear no room artifacts whatsoever.

    I ran your read through a frequency analyzer (Voxengo SPAN...free for download) and watched your upper frequencies peak right at 12K. I pulled up a 32 band EQ and pulled down the 12K control only...about 7db and it softened that slight zing pretty nicely.

    But overall, your sound is very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks TxTom and Donald Anderson Solid! Yes Donald the spacing is off, thanks so much for pointing that out. My first time piecing together multiple tracks so I will definitely focus more on getting those spaces more uniform. TxTom I did do some EQ'ing based off the advise of a 15 year old on YouTube lol (don't judge me)! From here on out I will educate myself on the necessary aspects of editing through more credible sources lol. Your input on my sound bordering on sibilant and the possible reasons why was very helpful. Thanks so much.

    Peer Feedback:

    Could you re-post this without the EQ?? That could help in seeing if there's NEED for it. A good mic doesn't need much help for most people IMO. Some will disagree.

    If you want advice on how your space is without going overboard with the audio plugins, post something without any processing at all. There's a tendency to over-complicate things with the sound. The only EQ I apply to my sound is a very slight drop at 90hz to lessen a slight bass bump created by the foam/enclosure of my audio booth. Other than that, I do nothing else to the frequency levels in my reads.

    Peer Feedback:

    Other than the sibilant issue that TxTom covered and a couple of loud attacks (on the word "fat"), the sound quality is really quite good.

    Performance wise, a couple of things to think about:

    The energy (get it? energy?) is really good and maintained throughout. The interpretation is also good, for the most part.

    There's a typo in the script. I question whether there is such a thing as "fat carbs". More than likely, there's a comma missing there. Consider that that line is just a kind of repeat of the "list of four" that came before - "No calories. No fat. No carbs. No sugar." And in the next sentence, I would submit that the more operative words there are "hectic" rather than "get" (as in "So no matter how HECTIC your days get" as opposed to "So no matter how LAZY your days get") and "refreshing" instead of "way" (as in a "REFRESHING way" as opposed to a "YUCKY way"). Those are loaded, descriptive words and the copy writer chose them for a particular reason.

    Don't know if this copy was taken from an actual spot. But if it is, it's probably one of those overly-wordy, 30 second spots. So you need to shave off about 2 seconds without it feeling rushed. Not an easy task.

    Side note: I had an in-studio audition today with the exact opposite problem - a 30 second spot with not enough copy. I came in at 20 seconds and was asked more than once to slooooow dowwwwwn. It took 4 takes to get the pacing they wanted.

    Peer Feedback:

    Personally I thought the track sounded great.

    The problem with feedback here on the forum is that ppl are using what they think are pro quality gear which tends to be entry level on the market.

    Headphones, preamps and microphones all have different frequency responses, and especially headphones "hype" certain frequencies. Also some listen to tracks without flattening their eq because they use certain settings for their own work which if you recorded flat, depending on their playback adjustments will make yours sound like crap. The preamp they are listening through (since most use their pre for both recording and playback), can color the sound, and depending on the level they listen to without having the track mastered may sound low, or clipped etc.

    I wish ppl would focus on technique and not worry so much about the quality except if there is a real buzz, hiss or echo in their recording. Feedback on sound should only be done by pros, technique should be done by peers. Thats what this forum was built for.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks jamesromick. Yes, fat carbs should have definitely had a comma. Thought it was weird but didn't even bother to realize that it was an exact repetition of the first list. Thanks so much for pointing that out as well as words that would have been a better option to emphasize.
    TotalMixandMaster, yes makes sense. Thanks a bunch for pointing that out.
    I have just added another practice recording (Flonase) with no EQ to hopefully get a true depiction of sibilance and everything else that was mentioned. Again, thanks everyone for all of your help.

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    Energy Fuel

    Script:

    How did we come up with the first energy drink for women? Nothing to it. No calories. No fat. No carbs. No sugar. Finally, there's a drink that zeros in on just the kind of energy a woman needs. New Energy Fuel. No calories, fat carbs or sugar means it's full of energy but free of guilt. So no matter how hectic your days get, there's a refreshing way to put the positive energy back into your life. Fill your life with positive energy. New Energy Fuel

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any and all comments appreciated! Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds like a voice I would hear on the radio or TV.

    Peer Feedback:

    You'd get a callback for this one, I think. I also think that there's a flaw in the copy. In the 7th sentence there probably should be a comma between "fat" and "carbs" because the items are separated previously in the copy. I don't know what "fat carbs" are. Overweight carbs? A lot of copy, in under :30, and it made sense. Bravo!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep nice one there !!!
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James and Balazs!

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    Fage

    Script:

    There are some people who say its the best yogurt they ever tasted
    And...there are some people...
    Who haven't tasted it yet
    Delicious Nonfat, authentic Greek, strained yogurt.Extraordinary fruit flavors
    Fage's Total, plain extraordinary

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear meganmet@me.com's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Megan. I loved your performance! Your words were clear, crisp, and I enjoyed the way you took the script and used different versions. Also you have a beautiful accent and I can see you doing quite well for this industry. Best of luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Look forward to hearing more of your stuff. Liked this one. Accent is classy and your articulation is right on.

    Peer Feedback:

    Omigosh, gorgeous voice! I liked that you were less and less afraid to sound fully British as the takes continued; best may have been No 2. I liked the wry understated "haven't tasted it yet," the sort of humor-yummy of the piece. Dreamy quality of No. 1 was fascinating, though underwhelming inflection at the end. What a great idea, to make it sound like a high-end car commercial--or rather, those want to sound like this, as though they were about gourmet cheesecake. Timing in No. 3 had overlong gaps, but that can be easily edited . . the list of nonfat, Greek, strained, might need better or different scoring. Some mouth noise and overpron at points (ha, I should talk?), but I happen to love the big final T's, that irresistibly-beautiful-woman sound, made only more delicious by the contralto bottom notes; maybe the 2d syllable of "yogit" toward the end should be more like "yogut" . . I see the inflection challenges of the final sentence, which I can tell you're working out. This is great work--thanks for sharing your insights into the script with us!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice, a litttle sexy. The phrase "tasted it yet" is difficult. All those "Ts."
    Perhaps you could stretch it just a tiny bit for the American ear.

    Peer Feedback:

    3rd take was the best. very nicely done.
    I think this read has a mischievous wink before "who haven't tasted it yet". your 3rd take captured it, I thought. I could imagine a funny British commercial with some silly background scene of someone who couldn't possibly have tasted it yet -- like a tattered starving shipwreck survivor on a desert island -- just handed a yogurt....but I digress...
    well done. very smooth and sophisticated to this American ear.

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    Fage

    Script:

    There are some people who say its the best yogurt, they ever tasted
    And...there are some people...
    Who haven't tasted it yet
    Delicious Nonfat, authentic Greek, strained yogurt.Extraordinary fruit flavors
    Fage's Total, plain extraordinary

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear otto philips's recording

    Thanks for the advice, gang!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97916/script-recording-77316.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wasn't as into this read. I did like your emphasis on "are" in second some people line, but didn't feel you sold the "who haven't tasted it yet" joke to go with it.

    More mouth noise, a little punchy in places, I could hear some background noise that was gated? and then Fage is pronounced Fah-yea no Fa-hay.

    On the forums, we generally don't slate either. Welcome Otto :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Otto.

    Your voice fits this script very well. I can imagine listening to it in a television or radio commercial for something like this.

    I'm wondering if you're too close to the mic and/or you have too much compression going on. Certainly, I can hear those mouth noises and a bit punchiness in the audio. I would ensure you're 4 - 6" from the mic and off-axis. I, too, can hear the gate Bean mentioned.

    "it yet" came out "ih-yet". Conversational yes; but also imagine if you were hearing this while driving. A little delineation is OK from time to time.

    I didn't feel your connection with the script. There were some very "readie" moments. Speak to the mic as if you're speaking to your friend.

    All the best,
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you very much for the great notes, Steven and Bean! Incredibly helpful and right in-line with my coach's guidance. I have a lot of work to do...

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    Famous Daves Baby Backs

    Script:

    Dave's Baby Backs are back at Famous Daves!
    Try Dave's original Baby Backs, Seasoned, smoked for hours, then slathered in Dave's very own honey sweet BBQ Sauce. Or try Dave's Memphis style Baby Backs. Dry rubbed with herbs then flame kissed to lock in the flavor. Hurry in to Famous Dave's! Dave's Babies are back, but only for a limited time.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    2 interpretations.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/FamousDaves-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The track works very well with the copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    First read went well. There was an extra word added to the last line.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oops. I did it both times. Funny how your mind plays tricks on you.

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    I liked the first interpretation better. The second came off a little too "cartoony" if that makes any sense. But nicely done! The only thing that caught my ear on the first take was the upwards inflection on the final line. Might just be me tho.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, I really like the first take. Great performance all around on that one. You decided to clearly articulate "flame kissed to..." but I think it would be okay to be a little less perfect there...in keeping with a more conversational delivery.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    I have three takes on this one, all slightly different styles. I'm wondering, since I was left to my own devices, would any or all of these fit the product I'm trying to sell? Mainly practicing technique...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-60159.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the second one best! ...but you're right, they're subtle differences. To me, the first one had the most enthusiasm, which is great if that's what the client wants.
    The second one seemed just right, but I can't exactly say what made me like it more than the third :)
    I just like the consistency of your sound and the ease of your delivery. Your voice is relaxed and believable.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like one and two. I like the energy of the first. I like the tone of the second, too. The third seemed more intimate, almost more like if it was for a bar? But it's subtle, so dunno...

    They were all well done!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tvsellen's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked the friendly quality of this recording. It was very genuine/authentic. I'm wondering about your pronunciation of "oranges" in the first sentence...it sounded like orn-ges. Maybe I'm too particular... Pacing could be a little quicker and I hear the fuzzy background sound. But I'd buy orange juice from you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for your input Boxermom2000! Yeah, I don't yet have a very quiet room in which to record. So I'm kind of tethered to my desktop at the moment. I suppose I could do it on a laptop in a closet or something?

    Peer Feedback:

    L O V E D IT!! Very smooth, natural, friendly read.....you talked to me! FABULOUS!

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    Thank you so much!

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    It feels personal...almost. You're reading a script to the mic. I think Donald Sutherland does this commercial...and it's so very well acted. Might be on YouTube. He's slower, giving the video time to develop beneath the words...takes a full thirty seconds to flesh this out. Of course it's got his characteristic sound ...but it illustrates how to take a script and make it fit a time slot. Imagine delivering this script to some grandkids (you don't sound like you're old enough to have any)...but try and imagine being a story-teller bringing this read to a small audience. Personalize it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the idea of a storyteller to a small audience! Thanks, TxTom and I hope there's no hard feelings.

    Peer Feedback:

    None at all. One thing about being on the forum...takes a thick skin and a willingness to hear things you might not want to hear. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    totally agree with TxTom, eveything was perfect in this.... as you are speaking imagine you pause for a moment to take a mouth full of this tasty orange drink and savor it in the words.... let listeners feel the taste of the oranges.... its your orange grove its your orange juice and you want to share it with us... the world.. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice.

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    Frappucino Happy Hour/ Root beer Fizio

    Script:

    Frappuccino Happy Hour

    Frappuccino Happy Hour is back! May 1st through 10th, only at Starbucks.

    Fizzio

    Introducing spiced root beer Fizzio handcrafted soda made only at Starbucks.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear OliviaKatz's recording

    Hey there, I am recording with an Apogee mic to Audacity. I have been having some weird static issues with recording my auditions and was recently told there is too much "popping" in my recordings. I am not entirely sure how to listen for "popping". I do not have a full on studio set-up as I do not have space but I do have a mic, a pop filter, a mac, and a little insulation behind my mic. Perhaps my pop-filter isn't up to par? I seemed to have remedied the incessant static by re-uploading Audacity but am not convinced it's a permanent fix. Any help would be much appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice. Very friendly! good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very Nicely done. Clean, clear and friendly sounding. I liked the fact that you included different iterations of the lines.

    Peer Feedback:

    I work with a PC, so I can't offer any help with a Mac/Apogee setup. However, the static issue may be as simple as having bad or crossed cable or electronic interference from florescent lighting or other electronic devices in close proximity to the mic. Audacity wouldn't be the problem.

    Pop filters are only so effective. Again, this could be a proximity issue - your closeness to the mic. A good rule of thumb is that "hang five" distance. Another technique is to speak off-axis to the mic and not directly into it. Having the mic a bit off to the side so that you are actually speaking past it and the puffs of air from the plosives (P's, B's, F's, TH's, K's, etc.) do not go directly into the mic. And there are a lot of them in this copy. Your second take on each of the scripts are less poppy that the others.

    There is just a touch of room echo in the recording. Insulation behind the mic helps cut down on sound reflection bouncing back possibly creating an echo. But remember that sound is omnidirectional, it also bounces off the floor, ceiling and sides, as well as from behind you. So if you are standing with your back to an open room, there may still be some echo or ambient room noise that the mic is picking up.

    Peer Feedback:

    This is really good. I sure love that mic, just picked one up myself recently. The noise near the beginning is in my opinion coming from your cellphone. I really like your delivery. The pops can be resolved by backing away a bit, or by using an equalizer to roll off the lowest frequencies. I also just picked up a kaotica eyeball (google it) which includes a nice pop filter and is an alternative to soundproofing your recording space or recording in less-than-ideal spaces. Here's where I am with recording and processing techniques after a couple of years of dabbling: https://youtu.be/pphjrGg_rYY ...good luck and keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I must disagree with Tom's tone as well as his substance. When I compare this recording to that of other less experienced folks, I hear expressiveness and personality. I hear life and enthusiasm. It's not perfect in recording or delivery, but this particular newb thinks some praise is certainly in order for this early-stage recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm going to be harsh because you've got some "newbs" giving you some "thumbs up/great job/you're almost there" kind of commentary that just isn't realistic.

    BTW, James isn't a newb.

    But I'm hearing a script being read without a real connection. I need to hear enthusiasm that just isn't being brought to the mic. It can be overdone, but it can still be delivered with a bit more emphasis to the key words. Embrace a product you're enthused about...give just a little love to the syllables that make the read work.

    "FRAPpuccino HAPPY Hour is BACK! May FIRST through the TENTH, ONlly at STARBUCKS." is one way to vary that read. But I heard no real emphasis through your performance.

    My opinion, of course, is worth the value of the "virtual letters" on your screen. Same as all others.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really appreciate all of your feedback! Thank-you so much!

    I am very new to this industry and am mostly self-taught and studying independently, learning in isolation. So there are a lot of hurdles. One of them being not a lot of feedback on my recordings and delivery. I am also NOT an audio engineer--nor do I want to be one. (Voiceovers are my third career, and the acting/delivery/voiceover process is one thing, the audio engineering is another entirely). However, with that said, if one is auditioning at home it is clearly ESSENTIAL that the recording sound great. I am not in a position to put together an entire at home recording studio at this point though. So I need to figure out a way to get my recording set-up, up to par and as high quality sounding as possible, without converting one of my tiny-already stuffed with stuff-studio apartment closets-into a recording studio ;-).

    Anyways, I hope to be able to do Edge's full educational training at some point soon because I know I need more Education and I am super excited about voiceovers. Spblat, I really appreciate your help and feedback. I am listening to your recording on youtube now. Wow, there's a lot of stuff in there I would not have picked up on. So it's super helpful. And thanks for the encouragement. I know I have a lot of work to do, but am trying to be patient with myself because I am learning something entirely new.

    Thanks ya'll! Look forward to posting more/getting more feedback/ and hearing your work too!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

    This is the first time I have written my own copy. I just noticed when I checked the file for download that there is a small mouth click that I didn't edit out. I am not at the studio but thought I would post it anyway. Any and all comments are welcome as always.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113255/script-recording-93753.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your reads. They're smooth and easy to listen to. Only two comments:
    At the end of "stock market is down" I hear s slight click. (Easy to remove)
    I would pull the music back a little right after "unbridled love" so you hear the word "Glemorangie" better.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sign me up for some Glemorangie laddie! Well done.

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    For me, the Scottish accent is one of the most difficult to do well. But for a Brit, it's probably easier since you've probably heard it more regularly than us Yanks. I have a friend who's a Scot and has lived in The States most of his adult life, and he still has some of his brogue. The word I say to him most often is, "What?"

    Not sure that this particular music bed helps the read, in that there is a transition from good to bad that you do with the read, but it's not in the music - as in going from a minor key into a major key at the transition. This is all in a happy sounding, mellow major key all the way through. It doesn't help with the "conflict" of the text.

    I really didn't hear an obvious "click", but the end did get clipped off a bit.

    Recording quality is good, as always.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments.
    James, I chose that music bed as it was closest I could get to a transition piece at the time. I agree that it should go from a minor to a major but I couldn't find anything. I will look further into the library that I use and see if I can find something.
    I wish you all a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Balazs Pusztahazi's recording

    feedback welcome even if it's bad Regards Balazs

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Balazs,

    It seems to me that the pause for the comma after "malt" could be a "wee bit" (Scottish for "little bit") less than you did there.
    Should the pause after "cask..." be there? 'cause it breaks the flawlessness of the rest of the sentence...??
    I understand how you read "12" and "that" referring to time, but something after or before those two words might need a slight change in tone?

    I love the way the two last sentences sound....just perfect for Scotch Whiskey! Great performance, totally real!!

    Scotland has a lot to offer, best Whiskey for sure!! :D
    All the best Balaz!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Eva for the detailed suggestions
    How are you ?

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    Glenfiddich Single Malt Scotch Whiskey

    Script:

    The quickest thing we accomplish takes 12 years. It takes at least that long for our handcrafted oak casks to work their magic on our single malt, slowly surrendering their flavor to create our smooth, superbly balanced, rich, oaky Special Reserve. Glenfiddich Single Malt Scotch Whisky. Family owned and dominated since 1887. 40% alcohol by volume. Imported by William Grant & Sons, New York. Our family reminds you, enjoy this whisky responsibly.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Getting used to Audacity.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Glenfiddich-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Oops! I dropped a word.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,
    Nice read. I understand what you were going for here with the slow approach and I agree. Though I feel you really lost it from the 40% on. I realize you are treating it as a tag line but tag lines come at the end. Picking up the pace and then having to slow it down again just made it feel like mixed up pacing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, I had mixed feelings about that. The "disclaimer" part of commercials past seemed to get plowed through quickly. Now, I'm told, that it's just read flat at the same pace as the rest of the copy. I just made the choice for the fromer rather than the latter. I still wanted to come in at :30 or less.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice smooth voice. Sounds like your performance here would best be suited to a radio commercial.

    I am a beginner at voice acting, so I don't know much but from what I heard, I say your a pretty good voice actor.

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    Thought the approach you took was the right one. I wouldn't have slowed the last line down...the last line is also a disclaimer or plea to drink responsibly...all more obligatory stuff and not part of the 'sell.'

    I thought you did great EXCEPT at "smooth, superbly balanced, rich, oaky Special Reserve" I thought you should have varied your inflections just a little more. I'd keep saying "nice read etc" but it get's tedious after awhile. ;-) I listen to every read on the forum. I've been told I can be too acidic at times so I've fallen into a pattern of commenting only on ones that won't either require me to lie or falsely praise. In case you haven't noticed, I get persnickety with your reads because you're getting so much right already. Keep it up!

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    Glenlivet

    Script:

    In a world that can't wait 24 hours for a package, there's a place that still waits 18 years for a Whiskey. One place. One Whiskey. Glenlivet Whiskey.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Still trying to sound conversational with a slight twist on my delivery...also trying to see if I analyze the script correctly...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-59902.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Hank, thanks for your helpful comments on my reads recently. On this one, I like the gravitas, perhaps a tad faster would be interesting. You put the "still" in the wrong place. I think you understood the script, yes.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi hankradio,
    Nice read--I think the conversational / non-radio tone is more present here than in your "Land Rover" submission. Regarding the script analysis, the one question that came to mind (I could be totally off base here) is that perhaps this ad is supposed to be a play on the typical Don LaFontaine movie trailer thing, with the "In a world..." introduction. Not sure if that's the way this was intended to be read, just a thought! (Then again, you would probably need to bring back the announcer if you did it that way...)
    Best,
    Peter

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    Grey Goose Vodka

    Script:

    This is where musicians go to hear each other play. The room is alive. The crowd is full of familiar, knowing faces whose expressions are as much a part of the performance as the music itself. From this room, you’re transported to places all over the world and feelings from all over your life. That’s why you come here, to be taken there. Grey Goose. World’s Best Tasting Vodka.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    trying something different than usual.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-91640.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pacing is deadly sloooooow, and the delivery very actor-y. This is a 30 second commercial and needs to be severely tightened up.

    You may be working too close to the mic. Not so mush plosive popping, but all of the words F's, V's and S's sound like amplified static air, especially at the end of a ord. Could be that you're hanging onto those sounds for too long. The effect gets tiresome to the listener.

    Peer Feedback:

    OK. After a little research on YouTube, I found where this copy came from.

    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6qGtyQ9vhoo

    The commercial, in total, is 60 seconds - most of which is music, crowd noise and visuals. The VO clips right along and supports the action and the music. It doesn't draw attention to itself. The "stars" are the music and the Vodka, not the VO. The VO is only a supporting character and less obtrusive.

    So my previous comment kind of stands - in that, if you stripped away the music and the visuals, the VO (in total) is about 30 seconds, if not less. And the stars of the show are the product and the music/musicians, not the VO artist.

    Peer Feedback:

    @jamesromick, thanks for the link... I'd never seen that commercial b4, and after watching it I see your point. This is one of those that the directors cut up the voice parts and place them into the video. I noticed the V's, F's & S's b4 uploading and this is actually the 4th or 5th take because of them (it was really bad - I think I have my hardware adjusted right now though) I used to have a MXL 990 but now have a Rode ProCaster. The 990 would pick up the tv in the background, or any other sounds... but the Rode isn't quite so sensitive.

    I've listened to some of your work, and no longer feel like you're picking on me. Is there any way to privately communicate with you?

    Again, thanks for your input - damn, I've got a long way to go.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm easily found. Not too many James Romicks out there.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear biggjoej2003's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123947/script-recording-94577.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Bigg Joe,

    I would give you a solid 8 out of 10 on this. I like your choice of music and dramatization put on some words by stretching them. As for quality, you did a great job. You have big things coming.
    Best wishes,
    Tools

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the Vote of confidence and I appreciate your comments!

    Joe

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Hubert Williams's recording

    Thanks for all the reviews on the original, most believing it to be too fast. Here is a slower version. Is it better?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3115/script-recording-70021.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Better, but diction needs a little work. You have an awesome character voice.. why aren't you exploring video games? Best!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Javier, I will work on my diction. I do explore video games just haven't landed one yet.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Balazs Pusztahazi's recording

    comments welcome

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read. I enjoyed your accent and was able to clearly understand you. Nice pacing also. The one critique I would offer is to work on your "th" at the beginnings of words such as "the" or "those". But other than that, great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for listening and your comment
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Hershey's Bliss

    Script:

    Hershey's Bliss:
    one square inch of incredibly smooth rich chocolate.
    One square inch of joy, fun, indulgence.
    One square inch of bliss…Hershey's Bliss.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Wanda Phipps's recording

    This is my first try using a friend's home studio since I don't have one yet. Just learning the basics of Logic Pro. Wanted to know if there is a difference in recording quality and performance from the last piece I uploaded here. I am also considering this copy for my demo and wanted to know if it sounds fitting for my voice. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-27888/script-recording-58448.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wanda I'm fairly new and currently training, so I haven't worked my way up to "in-depth" critiques yet. But here are my thoughts. I like your voice for this type of add. You have a fun voice. But to me, the track is overpowering your voice to start (but I like the track selection). The product name at the beginning isn't as prominent at the end. It's clear, but it had more color and personality at the end. Not sure how to describe it, but the description of the chocolate sounds like just reading words. I don't get a picture of the product. The elongation of the word "joy" seems misplaced to me. It does seem like this ad would have been more sensual in description (or that just may be my own personal interpretation). I liked the way you said the name at the end. Seemed like reading the entire script in the voice of the last "Hershey's Bliss" would have been great.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought this was cute. I love your voice. I know what CL means about the track, but I've heard Nancy Wolfson say that music beds are intentionally a touch too loud in bigger market, national ads and that her engineers do it intentionally to make the ad sound big market in a demo. That it adds realism.

    I'd make "indulgence" more playful in a sexy way, maybe in a fun teasing (You know you want to eat it!) or chagrined way (...was I naughty to eat that?) so it's sexy but still in keeping with your playful, fun voice. Love the quirky pitch lift and tempo change on the last "Hershey's Bliss".

    Nice sound quality and friend. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I did a little YouTube research.

    I see where you got the music from this first clip. Uploaded 7 months ago

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wxOE6EoA5Qs

    The sexy version. Uploaded 2 years ago.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XDSsTPT1Y_E

    And something in the middle. Uploaded 1 year ago.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mQWzAxyAz_8

    So this is an older ad campaign. Notice that it's nearly the same copy, at least in structure.

    I am fairly sure that it was the same voice on all three of these spots. It's not an easily identifiable voice, meaning that I'm not sure if it's a celebrity or not. If it was, I think that Edge would caution you against using the copy for your demo. But since these spots were done so long ago, that might not be a concern.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much all of you for the comments. I really appreciate it. I think I have the music at around the same level as they do in the actual commercial. Also, I was using this even earlier version of the commercial as my guide (without the dark chocolate):

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5xqVxCJI05w

    She uses a bubblier more perky upbeat tone in this one than the others if it's the same artist. And actually I got the music from my friend who performed and wrote the music for the actual commercial and said I could use it for my demo. That's why I considered it and want to use it if my coaches say it would be ok. I will work more on it and see if I can improve the performance. But maybe it's too large of a name brand for me to use on demo but at least I know that it's a good type of copy for my voice. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're worried about the big brand name, you could always rewrite the copy--use it as inspiration instead of the exact script. Or you could just be coy with the name of the product, either never really mentioning it or cutting in and then out before it comes up.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, great idea Tonia--Thanks.

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    As I was reading the script before listening to the recording I imagined the read with the first line sounding sensual and purring. Then as the voice goes into the part about fun, changing the energy to more perky and finally ending with the quick high-pitched tag. I liked the way you did it, though. You must have been thinking about kids as your entire audience. The music bed sounded good.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you re-write the copy, please: either repost your re-write or explain your re-write in your description of the posting.

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    I think you nailed it. It sounds broadcast ready to me. I agree that the music sounded overwhelming for an audition or demo piece when you really want your voice to be the star.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Chris--that's definitely another take on the delivery tone that I can think about and TXTom I will definitely repost with a rewrite if I actually rewrite it. And thank you so much CindiH. I am so glad you liked it as it but, yes, perhaps the music could be lowered if I use it on my demo. Thanks again to all of you for your input.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    Please give me some feedback. What should I work on? Daisy

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read. I think that the recording quality was excellent and I loved the soundtrack that was picked. Overall I think that if you just added a little more "excitement" to your read that this would be great.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the energy you put into your read. Very nice pace and the music bed was good as well. My only nitpick would be that it sounded like the words were a little clipped or something. I just can't put my finger on it. Am I hearing a Canadian accent as well ? Just wondering. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'll try to figure out what it is. I'll add some excitedment, and yes it is a Canadian accent! :-) is it that obvious?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Daisy,
    Very nice voice! Love your accent! I heard one flaw in "no to” could that have been clipped in the editing? Overall performance very well done. I love it! Great job!

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    International Coffee

    Script:

    International Coffees
    As soon as Colette threw the cup she realized her mistake. She could live without Jean Pierre, but that was her last cup of French Vanilla Café. International Coffees

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ladykristine@yahoo.com's recording

    Still working on script interpretation and how to communicate that. Thanks in advance!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I wonder how you would sound in something longer, Great voice nonetheless

    Peer Feedback:

    For my money, the operative word in the second sentence is "last". I mean, she threw away the LAST thing that she'd ever want to throw away! No more French Vanilla Café! Boo. Hoo. Just kill me now!

    Delivery is a little brisk. Probably a 15 second spot. And you came in at just over 11 seconds. So, I heard a lot of words, really fast. But I didn't get the clear pictures in my mind's eye or the emotional impact of this little story.

    This is a really well written and constructed piece of copy. All the elements of the story (and commercial copy) are there. Pick it apart and tell me the story - in 15 seconds.

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    Jack Daniel's 2

    Script:

    Officially it’s called Jack Daniel’s Old Time Old No. 7 Brand Quality Tennessee Sour Mash Whiskey. But you can ask for Jack.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Since this is a short script, I put 5 takes in succession on here. They are pretty raw and slammed together pretty tightly. I wanted to see if there were any preferable nuances in the reads. I know that some of the levels are off and I do apologize for that. I'm not quite an engineer yet.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-47132.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    jamesromick -
    I liked #4 the best.
    great reads.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    I also liked # 4 ,also great reads and voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James, great tone and voice. The sound quality is a bit lacking in the mids around the 6K range. I found there wasn't as lot of difference between any of the reads. Normally, if you post 5 variations of the same script in one submission, you would hit different words or use inflections differently to emphasize the message in ways a director can get some ideas they may not have thought of initially. The key parts I think you missed on here are this:

    1) "Jack Daniel’s Old Time Old No. 7 Brand", no variation in the phrasing here. It is the Product name and the rest is a descriptor of the product. Here is a tip I got from a coach. When words double like "Old" in a sentence, don't hit/emphasize those but rather keep the tone even and hit the words following them (Time/ No.7). Its a common mistake new Vo's make and I was one of them.
    2) The last line you hit "You" on every recording. The focus should be on Jack. Since that's what ppl will ask for .... not you! .... make sense?

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree if you going to lay down takes they should be more distinctly different.
    Your approach on "officially" sounded a little too high brow for me, and your tag line was almost identical each time with the emphasis on the wrong word.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TREBUAD's recording

    Trying some new settings and flow measures

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2445/script-recording-22155.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Trebuad,

    Nice smooth voice. short script, so I can only add that you make want to stress the last line especially the last word Jack. "But you can ask for ...JACK!"
    Otherwise it sounds pretty good.

    Best wishes,

    Tony

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    Jack Daniel's

    Script:

    In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s ... smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.

    33 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Hello all, starting to practice some scripts for a commercial demo, the back round music would be different, couldn't find anything suitable royalty free. Should I continue to work on this script or drop it? As always, comments are very appreciative.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jack Daniel's Whiskey.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Perfect - everything perfect. I sure can't give any advice on how it could be better. Your voice ,the music, the mix - everything perfect.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it as well. You have such a brilliant DEEP voice!

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    Hey David
    Are you planning to include this script on your demo?

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    Yes I believe so. I am working on several demos, commercial, narration, video games etc.

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    I don't know if it's really an image that Jack Daniels would want representing the brand...to me you sound like you're trying to do a hill-dwelling, revenuer-dodging, still-brewing, law-breaking red-neck. Sorry. Maybe you're trying to hard at the accent. Keep in mind the pictures of Jack Daniels is that of a southern gentleman.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for your comments, I really enjoyed recording this one, just felt right.
    TxTom, thank you, your comments too are always much appreciated, but apparently you have never been to Lynchburg Tennesse, I've been to the distillery and I have met some great people down there. I'm not quite sure what accent you think I'm trying too hard at, I'm a South Side Chicago Guy and when I hear a hill-dwelling, revenue-dodging, still-brewing, law-breaking red-neck I'm pretty sure my TV is on and I'm watching Moonshiners on the Discovery channel. Sometimes their accents are so thick, they will run captions across the screen. I believe you understood every word I pronounced on this script. This was not a script for Gentlemen Jack, which is a smoother blend of whiskey, this is the, "Original Jack Made Way Back in 1866. Thanks again all, Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    David, I've lived in South Carolina, Georgia, Louisiana, Ohio and Texas. I've been exposed to a good number of accents/dialects in my personal experience and then, of course over time with travel and phone conversations etc.

    Again, about the brand...if you google an image of Jack Daniels and go past the local promotions that have girls in crop tops and the rock image (again...something that wouldn't convey the "man on the production line" approach) there are images of JD with a big formal hat and thin bow tie. That's not Gentleman Jack... That's JD.

    I'm not trying to be argumentative, but suggest that this delivery might be very very limited in focus. For a very specific audience...like "rednecks toffee pull".

    Peer Feedback:

    LMAO Tom! You know, there are a bunch of toffee pulling rednecks in this world and if they desire to pay me to do what I love to do well then so be it! I love free toffee.

    Peer Feedback:

    great read!
    I loved it. great character to keep handy. sounds a lot like the Duluth Trading "Ballroom Jeans" commercial.

    BTW, do you guys mean "taffy" . Not aware of people pulling toffee.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello again David
    You have to think if this script will or won't be on your demo, you might know this already but if not I guess the advice can help you. Most of these scripts on the edge website are existing commercials or ended on someone's demo already after working on it posting it and getting advice from peers. If I'm correct this script has been done by a couple of people on this site.
    The problem using scripts that are not "yours" meaning haven't been changed a bit, rewritten modified for YOU is, that when you start marketing your demos and you send it out drop it of at an agency etc... And the person who listens to your work hears a spot that is identical as someone else's they might not listen longer even if it's a superb demo.
    You really want to have a unique demo one that is just your's and shows your best abilities. Well hope it makes sense , and if you knew this all along , hope it will help someone reading it.
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Jack Daniel's

    Script:

    In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s ... smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psunderwood's recording

    I'd like to hear what folks think about the performance. Also, since I did a bit of editing on the sound file, is there anything really obvious that should be fixed? Thanks in advance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jack Daniels.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi
    I don't hear anything that needs fixin'. Sounds about as smooth as the whiskey to me.
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    hi ps,
    This to me can be a tricky read. If you were going for a :30 spot, you can slow it down a tad as you came in at around :26. The read felt a little rushed and not as relaxed as the script maybe suggests.
    A couple spots to point out:
    "In Lynchburg, Tennessee, you " : I heard "In Lynchburg, Tennesseeyou " and started off maybe a tad high.
    "We still make " sounded rushed.
    I didn't hear anything editing-wise that distracted me from the read, so I'd say the editing is fine.
    I took a shot at this some time back and did the exact opposite...although I thought I did alot of things right, it was way too slow and probably put some people to sleep!

    Peer Feedback:

    I second tj's assessment about the speed. You have at least another 3 seconds to play with.

    You might think of it this way. Start out with a pretty good pace and slow it down little by little as you go along. IMHO, this is a well crafted piece of copy, so take your cues from the text - for instance, you can draw out "way back" and "slow, deliberate fashion". And don't forget the ellipsis. Gimme the product name ... lemme taste it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, folks. To tell the truth, I wasn't shooting for a specific time, but this was exactly 30 seconds long before edits. The edits shortened pauses between sentences, and got rid of some small mouth noise. That said, yeah, some phrases are a bit rushed; trying not to give an overly enunciated read, I guess.

    TJ, your recording was what suggested this spot to me...I wanted to get the feeling you got without falling asleep

    Peer Feedback:

    Usually when I think about whiskey I think raspy but your voice surprisingly fit this script. The pace at which you were speaking seemed good and you have a very friendly, inviting voice. You make me want to visit Tennessee.

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    Thanks, Tim. My big issue here (other than the stuff others have pointed out) was not going into a hokey faux Southern drawl; I'm from Connecticut...we don't do drawl, y'all.

    Peer Feedback:

    You may not do drawl, coming from Connecticut but your voice has the smoothness of Jack Daniel's. I thought you emphasized the name very well, making it sound like you really love your Jack.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love, love, love this. I think it would be even better a little slower in spots--give it a little more air. Really like your phrasing and how you say "Jack Daniels" at the end, dipping down with a little grit in your voice.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstorms's recording

    Just having fun - got a little frustrated with trying to do this in :30 and making it sound folksy

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    Peer Feedback:

    WOW!

    Talk about getting mixed messages. Rap and Jack.

    How does the Sesame Street song go? - "One of these things is not like the other."

    Fun stuff - Odd combination.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ohhhh my.... Jack'd UP ... Must be their new line :) Glad your having fun,, fun to listen to too

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    This is awesome. :) It reminded me of an odd techo-country Sugar Hill Gang's Rapper's Delight. I can certainly understand your frustration. "Folksy" is difficult to pull off. Maybe you read it in your natural voice and the folksy part is brought in with new background music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks all - Trust me this was just a one-off (love SHG BTW and I love odd combos). But to be serious, James mentioned in another thread this is a well written piece of copy and I tried a few times, but I feel I can't be true to this script in :30. I don't think I have trouble with folksy, I just have trouble with "folksy in :30" It just ends up sounding like an ad for a Memphis McD's or something. Maybe I'm just letting the mental imagery block me...Every time I read it, I just imagine people taking their country time in the middle of the road, or picking wild blackberries, and we're telling them to move faster, or move the heck out of the way!

    Peer Feedback:

    I live in Memphis,,, there's more Rap than country :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I was like "whaaa?" Too funny. Thanks for the laugh, and for keeping it fun!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mrwolfe's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114443/script-recording-93405.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Mr. Wolfe

    2 lines aren't a lot to work with, but his is a brand that speaks to your vocal range I think.

    I think your interpretation was good, but you could go for a much more casual/positive approach. Less announcer and more you. I wanna hear that smile and relaxation as you sip on a glass of whiskey, so add a smile into your reading and think about how damn fine that whiskey is. (I think it's gross but that's just me)

    I also feel that it has far too many breaks and not much of a build. I'd say you may want one or two maximum, and maybe one in the second line:

    "Officially... it’s called Jack Daniel’s Old Time Old No. 7 Brand Quality Tennessee Sour Mash Whiskey. But you... can ask for Jack."

    Here is what i heard:

    "Officially... it's called... Jack Daniel's... Old Time... Old no. 7... Brand Quality... Tennessee... .Sour mash whiskey. But you can ask for... Jack.

    -quality and Tennessee should definitely have gone together

    -You can also hear yourself sipping in air during some gaps

    -heh which also has another context at the end... like you're a jackass... or you can go drink jack-s**t

    Vary your tones and record it multiple times until you feel that you've really hit the feel of it.

    Some hiss is noticeable but could be eliminated through some digital post processing.

    Keep at it! Good stuff

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, where it say's "heh which also has..." in the third hyphenated bullet point

    I meant to write "JACK, has another context"

    Peer Feedback:

    You also missed the overall joke.

    "Officially, it's called by this loooooooong name. But all you have to say is, 'Jack.' Everybody understands that."

    And that loooooooong name has to rattle off your tongue as fast as you can spit it out. That's what's funny about this copy.

    It's like trying to spit out "deoxyribonucleic acid" - it's just DNA to most folks.

    AND - This copy can be done in 10 seconds or less. (I did it in 7 seconds on one breath, without sacrificing diction or comic intent.) Short and sweet.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-72555.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, didn't this guy just do a Duluth commercial recently?
    lol. this sound great too.

    nice job!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    You get the banjo out of the case and sort of tuned up... It's hard to do just one...;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Southern accent sounds authentic, nice pacing too. I have an inclination to go out and ask for Jack, lol

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    Jack Daniels

    Script:

    n Lynchburg, Tennessee, you can park in the middle of the road to talk with a neighbor about taxes or the weather. You can pick enough wild blackberries to fill a tin bucket. And you can see a distillery where Jack Daniel made whiskey way back in 1866. We still make it in a slow, deliberate fashion, much as he did. One sip, and you’ll be glad to know we don’t ever plan to stop. Jack Daniel’s ... smooth sippin’ Tennessee whiskey.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gmura's recording

    Three's a charm, I guess... cleaning up my mess here, re-posting this JD spot I recorded tonight. Checking out some plug-ins I got, added a little compression to smooth out the VO.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116549/script-recording-92000.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality seems fine. And the vocal quality is fine as well. The "blend" with the music bed is good too.

    My initial reaction is that the delivery is a little "studied". What I mean is is that it sounds like you "chose" to emphasize certain words, you "chose" to use certain inflections, and you "chose" to read for the commas and other punctuation. In other words, it doesn't sound "organic" to my sensibilities. It's not necessarily "announcery" per se, but it does sound like an announcer reading the script rather than a friend telling me about the mundane happenings of everyday life in Lynchburg, TN and why JD is soooo smoothly (though deliberately) good. It's kinda the difference between "affecting" a persona and "being" that guy whose lived in Lynchburg his entire life and can tell ya all about it.

    There's something I heard recently in one of my sessions at the SAG VO Lab in NYC. The casting person suggested that I "make it a little sloppier" and relax into telling the story. Maybe that's the direction to go with this? Dunno. Only my 2c.

    Peer Feedback:

    I guess the trick is to be able to read and record a script multiple times, and yet keep it sounding 'fresh' and conversational.

    Thank you James , for your critique and passing along the valuable insight into making our VO's better.

    Peer Feedback:

    The other side of that too, is not to make yourself nutz by trying to apply too many "learned" things. Sometimes Occam's Razor applies:

    "Among competing hypotheses, the one with the fewest assumptions should be selected."

    Meaning that, more often then not, your first instinct is the correct or the best choice. In other words, "the simpler, the better." Or, "Don't work it so hard."

    Of course for that, certain fundamental and progressive skills are necessary. IMHO, you have those already.

    So I would suggest to back off a bit and let the ideas and concepts flow more organically. See the scene in your mind and talk to the listener like an old fiend, or a new acquaintance, in that down-home, Southern hospitality way (though, not necessarily with an accent).

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    Jell-O Cheesecake 2

    Script:

    Jell-O Cheesecake 2
    This is my fantasy -- cheesecake whenever I want it. Rich. Whipped. And waiting for me in its perfect little cup. Cheesecake by Jell-O ... Let your fantasy come true.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    This is a re-record based on the feedback I received. I tried to vamp on the sexiness a bit. ;o) Thanks everyone for your input. I left the original at the end so you can hear the difference. ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jello Cheesecake - Take 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the last read was better. The first read on this take sounded to over the top and not endorsing the product.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Daniel that the 2nd read was better than the first. The pace and read was more natural. Maybe you can try mixing the sexy style of the first read with the pacing of the 2nd. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I too agree with Daniel. The second read was better. It was more natural, but I agree with jewel as well, I would like a touch more of the sexy to bring out the fantasy. That's my note, try another take hitting the word "fantasy" instead of "your" in the last sentence and see if it doesn't give you the hint of sexy without overwhelming the piece. Good job.

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    Jell-O Pudding Tubs

    Script:

    Why did we put 22 ounces of our smooth creamy pudding into each of our Jell-O Pudding Tubs? Because if there was any less, you wouldn't want to share. Jell-O Family Size Pudding Tubs. Because it's magic.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Happy2Voice's recording

    Have new acoustic blankets in home studio. How does it sound? Do you think this type of read is fitting for my voice? Also, if you would please give me some descriptive words for my voice, I would greatly appreciate it. Thanks for listening.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/JelloPuddingTubs_L.Voutsinas_10.17.13_0.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Lynn,

    Is that You? I would know that sweet voice anywhere! As always I just love your voice, it's so kind and warm!

    Lynn, I did detect a small echo, or were you too close to the mic?

    I thought that you did a terrific job on your read, it flowed well, your pacing and tone were great!

    I hope that this helps you. Wishing you the very best!!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Carol for your feedback and your kind words.

    Peer Feedback:

    HI!! My monitoring isn't good enough to hear any reflections in the recording.

    As for the read, I liked the tone, pacing and overall feel. If I had one critique it would be the very first word..."why" seems a little softer than the rest of the sentence. Almost as if you were walking up to the mic just as the recording stated... Otherwise really nice.

    Finally, to describe your voice...young, playful, happy, kind and sweet.

    Hope that helps you out!

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't detect much in terms of echo but I am listening on a home computer not monitors. I did notice a strong whistling sound on the s's in the read. I think the read was warm, sweet and had a nice pacing. I hope that helps!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you - I appreciate the feedback and the descriptive words have been helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Boy, do I love your voice in this! And I love your light-handed, happy delivery. I agree on the sharp whistling s's. I like the idea someone had about hitting that first "why" a little stronger or longer to start, too. Love the rest.

    I just listened to a you-tube video the other day about editing and mastering audiobooks, and the narrator/producer had a little gap between his teeth that he said gave him some whistly s's. He mastered his recording in such a way that it bumped down that sound. It might have been when he was running the frequencies with his equalizer and he bumped down the volume on a very narrow spot on his curve, and that dealt with the problem. He just does it automatically on his reads. There are probably other ways to handle it, too, but I thought I'd mention it in case it becomes relevant to you. Sorry I'm not more facile with the jargon. :)

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    Jello Cheesecake 2

    Script:

    Jell-O Cheesecake 2
    This is my fantasy -- cheesecake whenever I want it. Rich. Whipped. And waiting for me in its perfect little cup. Cheesecake by Jell-O ... Let your fantasy come true.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    I'm working on connecting more emotionally and developing my audience so I sound more natural. Does it come across? General critique is also appreciated. Thanks! ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Jello Cheesecake.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello
    You have a great voice to work with. About the copy "fantasy, rich , whipped are words you could color a bit more, so the read becomes yummy. Actually rich and whipped sounds to much alike play a more with these.
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice...but you could go further with the 'sexy' attitude and not be going overboard. You're JUST shy of getting there on this one. Recording sounds good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I fully agree with Tom on this one. It feels like you're not pushing the "sexy". Commit to the read.You're voice is perfect for this style of read. Sound quality is really nice !!

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    Ditto to ramping it up a bit more. I hear "whipped" after "fantasy" and I'm not thinking about whisks! I'd either wink more or get a little smutty sounding with that one and hit the period hard. I don't think it needs to flow so much into the next sentence fragment the way you are by lifting your pitch because it's technically a list you need to close out. But your voice is so terrific and your recording quality is always terrific. "Whenever", "waiting", "perfect little cup", "your"---all great. I wish I could use my voice the same way! But I'd blush too much talking about Jell-O that way!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're going to follow Tom & jerry's (I made a cartoon reference), Tonia and Balazs's suggestions as far as the "sexy" goes - if you put just a little raspyness in there (without hurting your throat) in a slightly lower register, that might do it.

    Peer Feedback:

    James....Tom and Jerry drop anvils on heads. Keep that in mind.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the great feed back. I seem to get stuck once I commit to a read and can't make it dance in another direction. Your comments helped!

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    Jif Peanut Butter 2

    Script:

    Yesterday, Di and I took the kids to the beach. She’s so choosey, she packed 14 sunscreens, and it was cloudy. Anyway she takes out her peanut butter… I just about fall off my blanket. I mean how can a woman so choosey give her kids that brand. She told me she grew up on it…poor kid. So I took out my Jif, I waved it under her nose, she lit up like Times Square. Said Jif smelled and tasted more like fresh roasted peanuts, I thought she’d never give it back. So I wrecked her sand-castle and we died laughing. announcer: For more fresh roasted peanut taste than any other leading brand, choosey moms choose Jif.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any comments appreciated! Couple of things - I inadvertently cut out the word "I" after the first "Jif". Also - I am obviously the announcer at the end. I understand that my voice in the tag sounds the same as the conversational part - just trying to determine how the tag sounds in general. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53676.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice Mom spot. I don't actually know if this is correct, but I want to hear "pea-nut" instead of "peenit", since that's what Jif is made of. Another couple of nits to pick. Maybe "poor kid" is juat a throwaway and doesn't need so much emphasis. Or laugh it off. I also think you sped through the funny "So I wrecked her sand castle." Just went by too quickly for me to picture before getting hit by the tag. Of course, there might be video too if this is an on-camera. And now for something that may sound contrary to the previous statement. If this is a :30 (including the tag which would possibly be done by different VO - it says "announcer" which is a clue), ya gotta tighten it up. Biggest challenge there is is to cram a bunch of words within the time frame with all of the acting, intention, inflection, charm, etc., and make it sound natural.

    Peer Feedback:

    All good stuff. Thanks, James!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice! Believable mom delivery. Good job!

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    JIF Peanut Butter

    Script:

    My kids. All they care about is peanut butter. So I make sure they get the best. Ya’ know, I wasn‘t sure there was a best, until I opened the three leading brands, and found Jif smells more like fresh peanuts. That‘s how I know JIF is better. As long as my kids care about peanut butter, I want to know they‘re getting the best. Jif Peanut Butter.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rsykesnichols's recording

    Working on performance. Tried to use feedback from last submission and improve. Hopefully this sounds more energetic and natural.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126164/script-recording-96093.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, this good! Your inflection and tone are natural and sincere, pacing is good, too. I think the only thing missing was a clear target audience as it sounded a little like you were reading the script more than you were telling someone about how awesome JIF is. I've found that shift in headspace can made a huge difference. Overall, very nice!

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    Jif

    Script:

    My kids. All they care about is peanut butter. So I make sure they get the best peanut butter. You know, I wasn’t sure there was a best until I opened the three leading brands and discovered JIF smells more like fresh peanuts. That’s how I know JIF is better. As long as my kids care about peanut butter, I want to know they’re getting the best. JIF Peanut Butter ... for moms who care.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jillian Gee's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Starts very strong, but I felt the fourth sentence, "You know," was too rushed and high-pitched. It could have been stronger if it were slowed down and lower pitch. And the very last line... "Jif Peanut Butter... for moms who care"... I think could have benefited from a bit more emphasis to really let the listener know that caring moms buy JIF. Overall I thought it was a good read, though, with the start and the middle being spot-on.

    As for recording quality, it sounds clean to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your voice and the accent. It sounded conversational and that's a plus. But you tapered off somewhere in the middle, like you were going off mike, which is easily fixed. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have the perfect voice for this type of spot. I think you could take more time with it and let the copy breathe. For example: After "My kids", I think you should take a moment to think about your kids. Maybe you can smile and remember one of their crazy antics from earlier that day. Additionally, give some air after you say the brand name. You really want the listener to hear "JIF peanut butter", because that's what the entire spot is about.

    I hope this helps!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    this is just for some practice. welcome all feedback….

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    Peer Feedback:

    DFS -

    If you wrote the spot -- most creative (I live in NYC and am not aware of Jimmy Jones, if it exists)

    Quality job on both voices...you sounded different enough to pull this off...

    Nothing is perfect (but you came close :-) ) ...you slurred a bit as the Police Officer early in the spot -- otherwise believable and well done!!

    Bill

    Peer Feedback:

    nah, I didn't write it. it's a knockoff of a radio ad for Jimmy Johns.
    I heard a couple slurs too, but it supposed to be a comedy spot, so I left them in.

    thanks for the listen!
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really cool spot !!! I loved it!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the spot. I felt you were far enough apart in the character voices to not sound the same (this is a skill I need to work on). Question for you: did you read the lines by character and then edit, or did you read through it and go back and forth between characters as your read?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ken --
    I read the characters entirely through individually. As a matter of fact they were read over a month apart from each other - it was a "work in progress". I woke up one day with a really deep (for me) relaxed voice and decided to record the cop before my larnyx tightened up.

    one final editing note: I'm going to rework the cadence - it needs to be faster. The original commercial runs in :50-ish, and mine is :60. I'm going to play with it a little before I put it away for good - or put it on soundcloud.

    cheers,
    DS.

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    KARNATAKA'S CUISINE

    Script:

    The steaming hot crispy dosa with sambar has captured the palate of people all over the world .Our staple diet is rice,ragi and jowar .Wheat is also a part of our diet .Bisibele bath,Uppithu, Dharwad peda ,Mysore pak and Holige is our famous delicacies. Udipu and Kamath chain of reasturants are famous all over the world which caters for exellent pure vegetarian food for the masses.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Nishitha's recording

    Feel free to comment .

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nishitha. I recommend you read this script again with the intent of focusing on "the message" as a priority. It seems to me that you were focused on your voice and the performance was a bit "over-acted". You have a good quality to your voice; however, do not let it get in the way of the message you are conveying. It is sometimes a fine line we walk as voice actors.

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    KFC - IT'S UNREASONABLE

    Script:

    MAN PULLING A WAY FROM A KFC DRIVE-THRU. THE BAGS AND/OR BUCKET IN THE PASSENGER SEAT NEXT TO HIM.

    VO: It is unreasonable to expect someone to drive two-point-six miles,
    sitting twelve inches away from something that smells this ridiculously good,
    and not reward himself for the courtesy of serving as his family's chicken courier.

    HE REACHES INTO THE BAG, REMOVES AN ORDER OF POPCORN CHICKEN, HELPS HIMSELF.

    VO: So nobody needs to know about this extra order of popcorn chicken.

    SHOTS OF HIM EATING AS HE DRIVES, POPPING THE CHICKEN IN HIS MOUTH, TAKING HIS TIME WITH THE DRIVING,
    BUT EATING RATHER QUICKLY.
    AS HE PULLS INTO HIS DRIVEWAY, HE CRUMPLES THE EMPTY POPCORN CHICKEN BOX AND DROPS IT
    INTO A SMALL TRA VEL-TRASH-BAG HANGING IN FRONT OF HIS PASSENGER SEAT,
    THEN GRABS THE BAGS/BUCKET OF KFC. AS HE WALKS UP TO THE HOUSE, BAGS IN HAND ...

    VO: It's a delivery charge.

    SUPER: KFC. TODAY TASTES SO GOOD

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lahnkd's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love this! Way to go! Only thing that popped out to me was "this extra delivery charge". The elision between 'this' and 'extra' was perhaps too...we...'sex'y. ; )

    Peer Feedback:

    That was supposed to be a 'well' in there...

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    Kraft Light

    Script:

    Around here, the gossip is almost as good as the salad dressing. Kraft Light Done Right Salad Dressings are so good, you may not even know they’re light. Now that’s some news worth sharing. Around here, the dressing is Kraft.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lblankenship's recording

    Very first recording! Any feedback welcome, whether it's on the recording quality or the reading.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Lisa. I like your performance; nice enunciation. Perhaps a bit rushed; you could take it a bit slower and still hit a :15 slot Technically, I'd get rid of the thump or click at the very beginning, before your slate. The recording itself sounds a little "hollow" to my ears, but I don't really have the technical expertise to expand on that, and it could be my ears or speakers. I think I would take at least some of the breath sound out, especially at "good, you". Good first try! Let's hear more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much!

    Peer Feedback:

    Lisa:
    LOTS of room reverberation. You have a REAL live room. Consider some kind of noise dampening, like acoustic foam, or bedding foam or moving blankets hung around the microphone. Also, some very noticeable inhalation/breath noises in the recording. For this type of recording ( a commercial) slow down the read by about 25 percent. Hope that helps.
    All the Best from Raleigh, NC
    Mike W.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice energy.

    I agree with most of what everyone else has said.

    It's a little rushed. The 15 seconds time frame would only include the copy and not the slate. So you have a tiny bit more time to stretch the copy out.

    A little judicious editing might be in order to clip off the thump at the beginning. Most often you'll want to capture some room tone at the beginning and end of the read. Those extra couple of seconds aren't going to make the file size much larger, so indulge yourself with a little "dead air" at the beginning and end for editing.

    The overall sound quality sounds like you applied a noise reduction plugin rather than just recording in a "live" environment - it took some frequencies out of the recording and gave it that "hollow" sound psunderwood mentioned. You only need a fraction of a second sample of noise for those plugins rather than setting it to continually search the entire recording for noise as it goes along.

    Either that or you're recording in a very tight and reverberate space with a relatively inexpensive microphone/interface.

    Peer Feedback:

    That would be the latter! Thanks, James.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Lisa.
    Since others have commented in detail on your sound quality, I'll just say that this is a very good read, relaxed and natural and fun, and I think you are off to a flying start!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much!

    This was recorded in a linen closet. Looks like some modifications are in order!

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    Lacey J’s

    Script:

    Lacey J’s located in Santee is a roadhouse saloon and grill, and Dance Club. The food is fantastic! My favorites are the stuffed mushroom and Swiss Angus Burger, French dip and Caesar salad. Now open for lunch everyday from 11:00 AM to 2:00 AM. Ample parking with casual attire and reasonable prices. Full bar with outdoor patio, this is your local dance club with DJ, Karaoke and Live Music. We have a large dance floor and several pool tables for your enjoyment. Stop in today to Lacey J’s in Santee, if you need directions please call 619 448 8550. We’ll be looking for you, down at Lacey J’s.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mike Martin's recording

    This is another amateur script for an actual business I liked. Crafted script and accent to match an Radio Personality friend's impression of what an appropriate read style might be, according to my voice. BTW I'm anything but country but what the hay? Looking for any constructive comments. Thx, Mike

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    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation:

    I liked the vocal energy in the beginning of the recording. I think the ad-libbing robbed you of some energetic steam. Perhaps by just reading the words and keep the energy and pace consistent throughout would get me excited about eating some of those stuffed mushrooms at Lacey J's.

    Vocal interpretation:

    I thought the interpretation in the beginning of the copy was spot-on! Would have liked to seen the vocal interpretation be consistent throughout the read, all the way to the very last syllable! It looks like fun copy to read, so have more fun!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Alyx's recording

    Fun little audition... your critiques welcome

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job with a difficult piece of copy. Good idea to get a partner rather than do it all yourself, if you can't make the voices very distinct. Very good choice of music, too. You made strong choices and ran with it. Good on ya!

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL Actually that is me in both voices! Glad to see it came across as two! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Alyx
    I'am a newbe,But I'am here to stay.That was really,really,great.I have a long way to go so thank you.See you at the TOP.:)

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    Lender's Bagels (radio Commercial)

    Script:

    As a New Yorker, I know a good bagel when I see one. And let me tell ya, Lender's makes one that can't be beat! Available in all your favorite flavors. Hey, you can trust a New Yorker. Lender's...just like New York!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I upped the stakes a bit and added a little "Midnight Cowboy" to it.

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    Peer Feedback:

    There you go. Loved it, James.

    Peer Feedback:

    What did I say? Room for a "Hey, I'm walkin' here" to boot.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,

    I loved it!! You just made my son and I laugh with "Hey I'm walkin' here" Well done, always wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    Lender's Bagels (radio commercial)

    Script:

    As a New Yorker, I know a good bagel when I see one. And let me tell ya, Lender's makes one that can't be beat! Available in all your favorite flavors. Hey, you can trust a New Yorker. Lender's...just like New York!

    23 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Matthew Eagen? How'd I do? You're tryin' to loose yours. I'm tryin' to do one.

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    Peer Feedback:

    ramjamz, here! Hey James, very good. I think you really capture the flavor of the greatest city in the world, get that job!

    ramajmz

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read James, pacing, tone and interpretation is spot on.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the accent and laid back vibe, James, but your character sounds too relaxed given the setting of noisy, fast-paced NYC. I wonder if the "guy on the street" would sound more authentic if you backed off the mic and raised your pitch slightly to sound like you were speaking over the traffic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice accent James! That's what I call working your own turf. Having spent so much time in the city you know how it should sound so why not use it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good job James,
    I liked the bacground it was a nice touch..

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks everyone. I might try it again with more voice and attitude.

    One thing for Bill. I recorded it at around Midnight. I wanted to put more into it, but didn't want to wake the wife, eventhough my makeshift booth is on the other side of the house than the bedroom. I probably could have done it anyway. She could sleep through an atomic blast.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. Definitely a new voice from you James. I loved it. Oh, and thanks for my first shout out on the forum :) Be Well.

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    Munchery

    Script:

    What Is Munchery?

    In short, Munchery is the fresh, tasty food you want to eat. Delivered.

    Munchery lets you eat well, no matter what your day looks like.

    And since our menu changes daily, there’s always lots of choices. Everyone

    deserves great food and we’ve got all the options.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Skmigs's recording

    So I went through Edge's program and finished demos over the summer… then moved three times a