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    Words. They can do anything.

    Script:

    Words. They can do anything. They can call in a dog at night. They can bring comfort to an old friend. They can say happy birthday to a girl whose balloons are slowly sinking. But sometimes, words can get you into trouble. Like the human rights activist who was kidnapped for standing up to Government corruption. Or the journalist sentenced to 10 years in prison for sending an email. Or the thousands of men and women who are arrested and tortured just for demanding fair election. Now we need your words, to demand justice; to take a stand. To offer hope, to people around the world, who are silenced for simply speaking their minds. Write a letter or speak out today. Your words can lead to their freedom. Words. They can do anything.

    38 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LivingColor's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-135751/script-recording-99750.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the voice , most of the pace, and the sound quality was pretty good.
    I also liked how you backed off the mic - "make the mic do the work".

    But...it felt too much like one of those Sarah McLachlan animal rescue ads. Too much forced emotion or inflection. And the inflection seemed misplaced in some spots (e.g. "...whose BALLONS are slowly sinking.... I would've hit SLOWLY SINKING...director's call) .
    I think if you flatten out the inflection it will seem more professional. Punch up just the tagline for a final impression.

    Just my humble opinion,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Dave. Great advise! I tried a second recording using your feedback and liked it much better!

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear Brandonbeeman's recording

    Hi, I am new to voice over and I would like to receive some honest feedback. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Brandon, you have a nice casual way of speaking. However, you have a tendency to drop the energy at the end of your sentences so that they drop off melodically. I suggest that you pretend you are speaking to a friend and inject some more excitement into the read as though you can't wait for him/her to hear and see what's in store for them. Try it again and see how it might change the tone and melody of the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice start. welcome to the journey.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, I appreciate the tips LivingColor.

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    Creating Pivot Tables

    Script:

    The data that’s going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list, and must not have empty rows in it, nor empty columns. If you have any interim subtotals in there, get rid of them. Get rid of those empty rows. Click on any cell within here; Now on the Insert tab, go to the leftmost button -- many times you’ll simply click that button, then click okay.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback! Thanks so much!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked this read, Steph! You have clear emphasis and diction, you keep a nice pace to this technical copy, and there's a bit of a smile and tease I can hear in some of your instruction. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read - maybe a tad bit rushed for an instructional video. Your audience is going to be concentrating on following your instructions, so don't stress them out by dashing through the steps.

    It would be fun to pretend that there are visuals that accompany the steps, including some off-camera mouse clicking FX - which would really pace this read out in bite size pieces.

    Kind of like "The data that's going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list --
    , , - and must not have...." etc.

    just my 2c,
    cheers,
    DS.

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    AARP

    Script:

    Want to have a great retirement? AARP can show you how. Meet new people, learn new things, explore new places and more. Join us in championing your future and the future of every generation!

    47 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

    At first I wasn't going to upload this, because the word "championing" was so hard to pronounce.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105875/script-recording-99743.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Quince -
    I liked the friendly tone. But the starting question didn't lead me into the rest of the piece. the words made sense (as the editor intended), but it didn't sound like a question. Here's a performance "trick"....throw in a throw away line to help you get the question right. For example, "Do you want a great retirement? Or a great sandwich?...then edit out the sandwich line. The fake choice sets up the tone of the question for the rest of the read.

    and as you said, you swallowed "championing".

    Great sound quality, btw.

    cheers,
    DS

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    Aspen Soft Drink

    Script:

    Come with me and discover an icy new world of refreshment. New Aspen is here! Chillingly crisp and clear. Aspen -- different from any soft drink ever. Only Aspen has a snap -- a tantalizing snap of apple. Mmmmm -- Aspen’s different from lemon or lime. It’s an icy world of refreshment. Discover ASPEN -- the first soft drink with just a snap of apple.

    42 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gspiehler's recording

    I just moved my recording set up to a walk in closet in an effort to reduce background noise that I had in previous recordings. I am interested in the quality of the recording. Does it sound clear? Is the volume ok (too loud/ too soft). How is the performance? I learn alot everytime I post something, so please be honest and tell me what you think! Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129795/script-recording-99742.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Beautiful! Nice and clear! As an alternate version, you might consider going a little more saucy/evil with it just for fun. I loved how you played with your adjectives and brought this cold world to life! I'd totally buy that drink!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're going to slate (not required here, but good practice), leave a "breath" of space or a "beat" before going into the body of the copy. In other words, let them be two separate things. You kind of rear-ended the copy into your slate.

    Good pacing. Good timing. 30 seconds on the nose. You might pick up the pace just a smidgen to get it in at 28 to 29 seconds - leaving a little "air" at the beginning and end for the editor to work with. But for an audition, this is good as is.

    If you were selling booze or chocolate, the sexy thing works. But for a soft drink? IMHO, not so much. Because you're appealing to a broader audience - from kids to adults. Now if it were hard apple cider, that would be different.

    So, lighten it up and give it more smile and joy. This stuff is snappy and tangy, not sour like lemons and limes.

    Did you actually taste it before you said, "Mmmmm..."? In acting it's called "sense memory". Think of something that you really enjoy tasting (again, not the sexy decadence of chocolate, but something that makes your eyes pop like a tangy, fruity gumball) and gimme that.

    Use the onomatopoeia of the word "snap" as a clue - it's used three times. (One could also make the case that Aspen is a snappy word and contains the same letters - but that may be pushing the text analysis too far.)

    Sound quality is good. Did you use any processing FX?

    Peer Feedback:

    great sound quality. very bright performance. still a few p-pops. might try moving the mic a few inches away - or better yet a little off-axis from the direction of your breath.

    nice job.

    DS

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear marxmic's recording

    Listen to this corporate demo, tell me what you think. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good.

    The only thing that I found disturbing is the machinegun-like rat-a-tat-tat at the beginning and after "assets" toward the end. In the middle, it seemed fine. If you can fade in and lessen it a little that second time, it might create a better balance in the mix

    Only my 2c.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dazzleween6's recording

    Jane: Oh , oh my goodness... Daddy I was walking! With little baby, little baby monkey, and I drew a picture. Suddenly monkey starts crying. But I turned around and there's a whole fleet of them. There's an army of monkeys a huge tree full of them, Screaming at me: ooh ooh eee eee, ahh ahh Terrified, I was, terrified. Suddenly I was swinging in the vines up in the air. Swinging, flying, I was in the air. And I'm all surrounded... And Daddy they took my boot! And I was saved, I was saved by a flying wildman in a loincloth!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think your performance doesn't have the right amount of zaniness and enthusiasm that I'd expect Jane to have. It was not enough energy. Therefore, the story that you told us wasn't convincing enough. She just experienced a misadventure that was quite scary, but exciting. And then there she goes, explaining what has happened to her in a bizarre manner. So try to convey that into your performance. Maybe this video will help. This is what the original actress did to make her story sound convincing. https://youtu.be/uDALTaqBRic

    As for your pronunciation, I think you need to work on that too. "Picture" should be pronounced "pik-SHur', not "piCHer", as in baseball pitcher. "Turned" is not pronounced "turnt". The "U" in full should be a short oo sound, not a long oo sound, as in "fool". And you're missing the "N" sound in "surrounded". Also, you tend to turn your "TH's" into "D sounds". And a lot of your "ING" words sound like "IN" words.

    As for the recording quality, it was pretty good. I can hear a few pops here and there. Maybe a pop filter should do the trick. Or just don't record too close to the mic.

    I hope you don't take this the wrong way. I'm not trying to offend you. I just want to help you improve your performance. So I hope you take this into consideration.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice adjustments! I like this read with the more moderate pitch level, I think it was right on the money for the age of this character. I do think you could go even faster, as if your mouth can't keep up with your brain. While you're playing with it at home, you might try to read it from some totally different points of view (they don't have to make a lot of sense), such as reading it as if you were telling a scary story to a good friend, or making a confession after being busted for missing curfew, etc. and then once you're nice and loose, do it again with your "normal" read. It's an exercise my coach gave me and it's been so beneficial. Keep playing! Keep up the good work!

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    A sweet lesson on patience.Part 1

    Script:

    As the first hint of sun was creasing the horizon, she suddenly said, 'I'm tired.Let's go now'.
    We drove in silence to the address she had given me. It was a low building, like a small convalescent home, with a driveway that passed under a portico.

    Two orderlies came out to the cab as soon as we pulled up. They were solicitous and intent, watching her every move.
    They must have been expecting her.

    I opened the trunk and took the small suitcase to the door. The woman was already seated in a wheelchair.

    'How much do I owe you?' She asked, reaching into her purse.

    'Nothing,' I said

    'You have to make a living,' she answered.

    'There are other passengers,' I responded.

    Almost without thinking, I bent and gave her a hug.She held onto me tightly.

    'You gave an old woman a little moment of joy,' she said. 'Thank you.'

    I squeezed her hand, and then walked into the dim morning light.. Behind me, a door shut.It was the sound of the closing of a life..

    I didn't pick up any more passengers that shift. I drove aimlessly lost in thought. For the rest of that day,I could hardly talk.What if that woman had gotten an angry driver,or one who was impatient to end his shift? What if I had refused to take the run, or had honked once, then driven away?

    On a quick review, I don't think that I have done anything more important in my life.

    We're conditioned to think that our lives revolve around great moments.

    But great moments often catch us unaware-beautifully wrapped in what others may consider a small one.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sinclair's recording

    Just dusted off the sound equipment after several years of non-use. Interested in overall feedback regarding recording quality and performance. I have historically had problems with output volume with this equipment, so info about how it comes out on your end would be helpful.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really could understand the quality, pacing, and emotion in this script. Im still learning this field but you delivered it well. It sounded like an audiobook narration.

    Peer Feedback:

    Beautiful reading! As for the recording quality, I thought the volume was a little quiet. I had to turn up my speakers to hear the recording, so you may need to increase the gain when you record.

    As for the performance, I like the voices you gave the characters. It wasn't too exaggerated or over the top, it was believable and added depth to the read. I couldn't tell if the driver was male or female, but I don't think it really mattered either way. I think the read was easy to listen to, not too choppy or boring. I would have liked to hear just a bit more emotion in the narrator in the end as she was reading the thoughts of the driver. The driver believes that he/she hasn't done anything more important in his/her life, so these thoughts may need a bit more of that feeling coming through.

    Overall, fantastic read for an audiobook, very clear pronunciation, even on the tricky words. My big advice is just to make the recording a little louder.

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    "Norte Refresher" Health Soft Drink Spot

    Script:

    Introducing a whole new kind of soft drink. With real fruit juice, 10% of your daily calcium and only 10 calories in every 8 oz. serving, it tastes so good you can feel it in your bones. For delicious taste with calcium, the only way to go is Norte.

    51 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear noellehensler's recording

    I am having trouble keeping high energy while lowering volume. How was my energy for this read? I'd love tips on how to fix this issue. How was my overall performance? Recording my demo soon and would love to know what to practice.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think your energy level and pacing were good. Unfortunately, I am not one who can give much feedback in the area of recording quality, but it sounds like there may be a slight bit of open air noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked your energy in this read! I sound the middle was a bit choppy, I don't think you need to add the pauses between "juice...10% of your daily calcium ... and only 10 calories". I love the tag at the end, I could hear you smile while saying "Norte." Nice!

    I also am no expert on recording, I am also just learning. Though I can say that I could hear alot of the "s" sounds coming though. Do you have a pop filter? Or it could be the recording volume is a little high. But again, I am also new at this!

    Overall nice job! I thought your voice sounded competitive!

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    Clorox Disinfecting Wipes

    Script:

    Food, moisture, and lots of places to hide. No wonder a billion germs call your sponge home. New Clorox Disinfecting Wipes. Don’t spread germs. Kill them.

    55 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

    On the first take, I tried to sound more annoyed. On the second take, I tried to use more energy.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like the pauses between the words in the list at the beginning. My advice is to have a specific person in mind who you're talking to about this in order to make it sound more natural. The tag at the end is WAY too intense! Try shrugging your shoulders as you say the last line. It should sound more matter-of-fact rather than threatening. Instead of focusing on KILLING the germs focus more on the fact that you finally found something to help you clean and stay healthy. It will give your read a more light, bright feel.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, noellehensler.

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    Air Jamaica

    Script:

    On our island, you can party all night, or you can have a quiet, romantic evening. Maybe rocking to Reggae suits your style, or how about strolling through a posh plantation while sipping a mango margarita? No, it’s not a dream, it’s paradise -- it’s Jamaica. And Air Jamaica is waiting to whisk you away on your choice of non-stop flights from New York to Montego Bay for only $199! Now that you don’t have to sell your soul to get to Paradise, what are you waiting for? Call your travel agent, or AIR JAMAICA at 1-800-JET-AWAY.

    64 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vivradlein's recording

    I decided to get a bit ambitious here. I wanted to find a royalty free/free piece of reggae music to add to my script, but everything I found was royalty free but when you read the fine print it is not exactly free. Any suggests where I could get the music? Also, how was my performance? Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-134764/script-recording-99713.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    WOW! Just capital WOW! Well done. I don't know if this was written with the intent of a Jamaican accent, but you NAILED it! Brave choice and very exciting to hear.

    A suggestion to make it even better (the perfectionist in all of us is our worst enemy.)
    I understand that you went slower so that we could understand exactly what you were saying WELL DONE! but there were some parts you could have sped up a bit. Stuff that might be less important..or even the more exciting bits. It is a relaxing piece that becomes exciting in the middle then satisfied at the end. I think you could break this apart even more to chose a speed that is perfect for each individual phrase instead of just "medium" throughout.

    I apologize - I have no clue where to find good free music :'(

    Peer Feedback:

    Dot was irie. Gud job, Seesta.

    +1 with speeding it up to make it more of a vacation promo.

    cheers!
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this was perfect! I was recently in Jamaica and I felt like I was listening to a native talk! You nailed the accent perfectly, even the inflections at the end of sentences. Spot on!

    The recording was a little loud, but clear. The only thing I would add is a bit more of a smile in your voice. Sound genuinely happy and proud of your island. I met so many kind people in Jamaica and I was always blown away by their big, genuine smiles.

    Very competitive voice!

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    Cheerios 2

    Script:

    Cheerios and fruit. Some couples were just made for each other. For a taste you can fall in love with again and again. Berry Burst Cheerios.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

    Did two takes. On the first take, I was trying to use more energy. On the second take, I was trying to sound more dreamy.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think the pause after "For a taste" was just a hair too long, but I like where you were going with it. I especially enjoyed your second take! I liked your idea of playing to the magic and lighter-than-air qualities of romance specifically -- nice choice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Steph.

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    eSuicideTalk

    Script:

    eSuicideTalk will help you understand suicide better and become more aware of it. Through this program you will learn about things that you can do to help prevent suicide in your community. For many people, participating in a program about suicide can also be personal....you might be worried for someone you care about, or concerned about your own risk of suicide. In this program, we’ll explore the question, “How do we talk about suicide?"

    66 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love your voice for this! This is a great read, my only advice is to enunciate a little more. Practice hitting those T's and D's and other stops at the ends of words without it sounding too forced. I know people don't talk like that in real life conversations, but in VO it's very important. Also, I love the tone of your voice, how sympathetic you sound. However, toward the end it almost sounded TOO sympathetic to the point where your voice started to quiver a little. Keep that tone, because it is a serious read, but maybe make it more matter-of-fact so you don't get too invested in the seriousness of it. Hope this helps!

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    I am considering this spot for my commercial demo. It is "borderline character". I don't want to ruin the flow, but I definitely want to show my range. Think I should include it? Are the P's hit a bit too harsh?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your tone and pitch goes nice with the piece. The beginning seems a bit rushed with a slight difficulty hearing the phrase "Mommies out there" but this is an easy fix with adjusting pace. The "p" sound is a little harsh, but I always have difficulties with them as well so it's understandable. I enjoy the ending to the commercial as well. I think you nailed the timing perfectly!

    Peer Feedback:

    At first, I didn't get it that your nose "all stuffed up" - I thought it was just bad sound quality. In terms of a demo excerpt it might work if the editor dubbed a sniffle or other effects that painted the picture of "a sick kid".
    it's up to the director...

    DS.

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    Marooned

    Script:

    The last thing I remember was, spiraling through outer space, untethered from my space craft, knowing that I was going to die. And know, I'm alive, or at least I think I am. I don't know how much time has passed. I'm in an unfamiliar environment. Somehow a greater power has brought me back to life. But the question is who or what? Or more important why?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lambertvo1986's recording

    I'm new to the vo arena, just built a home studio and have a yeti mic, curious if it sounds alright with limited editing and what can be changed?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Welcome to the fun world of voice acting! Please don't hesitate to ask any questions if you ever need help. In regards to your recording I would say your pace works well in certain areas, especially the ending with a quizzical "why?" Try to avoid having too long of pauses between sentences, but otherwise pace was good. One thing I noticed was the noise floor being a little high, but that can be fixed by editing or introducing more sound proofing to your home studio. You did a good job with enunciation and taking your time with the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sound quality sounds perfectly fine to me. The yeti will put in a lot of high end (I had one, and it served well for a year or so), but you being female, the high end doesn't seem too bright. Worst case is that you could EQ the air band down a bit.

    The only noise I noticed is a very low background hiss if I really crank up the monitor volume on my headphones (these are good studio monitor headphones btw - I trust them). I think a simple noise gate could be used there.

    regarding the performance: the script is written in a very choppy manner, but extreme choppiness is tough to listen to. It's up to you to push some phrases together, and lengthen the pauses on others just to mix things up.
    James Romick is an expert at the acting aspect of this kind of read. He may chime in.

    I hope that's helpful, cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very nice voice and I enjoyed the pacing. The only part I would change is the sentence where a greater power has brought me back to life. I think it would be good to give that sentence the emphasis it seems to request, rather than letting it be lost in the flow. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the pacing for this and your voice. The only thing i would be careful about is in the line somehow a greater power has brought me back to life, me sounded like my. Other than that good job.

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    TARZAN MONOLOGUE

    Script:

    Jane: Oh , oh my goodness... Daddy I was walking! With little baby, little baby monkey, and I drew a picture. Suddenly monkey starts crying. But I turned around and there's a whole fleet of them. There's an army of monkeys a huge tree full of them, Screaming at me: ooh ooh eee eee, ahh ahh Terrified, I was, terrified. Suddenly I was swinging in the vines up in the air. Swinging, flying, I was in the air. And I'm all surrounded... And Daddy they took my boot! And I was saved, I was saved by a flying wildman in a loincloth!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dazzleween6's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Still new so I don't know how to offer to fix it, but I noticed there is a bit a sound in the background? Almost like a steaming kettle or something. Other than that it was a very funny read :) A good funny!

    Peer Feedback:

    This was a fun piece! At first I thought the character was six or seven years old -- I'd be interested in hearing another take using a lower pitch to make the character sound a little older. I also think you could speed up a bit in places, since she's so excited. I really enjoyed your monkey noises and I loved the dreamy quality you gave the last sentence. Nice job!

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    Athletic Apparel

    Script:

    Being a high-performance athlete is about being dedicated, focused and driven. To get there, you need everything in your life to support your goals. Incrediwear is all about pushing you past your limits, and helping you redefine your personal best.

    With Incrediwear, every day is another chance to live the life you want. Be at the top of your game.

    Perform incredibly. Perform at your peak. Every day.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Was going for an upbeat, motivational, "no nonsense" delivery

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    Peer Feedback:

    Maybe a little faster for an upbeat read? The motivational point is on though!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the pace was fine. I can't see getting all that script into :15.
    I still feel like your inflections are pushed too high. The script has a lot of energy in the words, so you don't have to over-inflect (like one might do in a list) to get the message across. It gives the feeling that the listener needs a lot of help to get it - which is true if the audience was very young. But you're not reading to children.

    hope that helps,
    DS

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    Marshmello

    Script:

    Marshmello is coming in hot to New York City with two back-to-back shows Friday January 26th and Saturday January 27th. The Saturday show is ALREADY SOLD OUT, and very limited tickets remain for Friday. Don't miss out on the hottest act of the year and get your tickets now at MadeEvent.com/marshmello!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear lbezzell's recording

    I have just set up a new studio in my home using these panels: https://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B00U3ZIAUE/ref=oh_aui_detailpage_o00_s00?ie=UTF8&psc=1 I've gotten some feedback that my recordings sound different now and there is background noise and not as warm sounding. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, so this sounds like a radio promo. It sounded pretty good.
    I didn't hear any room noise. I did hear a little reverb that seemed more like you were overdriving the mic. Maybe back up another couple inches. it's ok to record at a fairly low level, and bring it up in the DAW.

    Also, the read seems a little muddy - maybe EQ the high-end up a little.

    I'm not sure you want "warm" - I'd go after "bright" if I were you. Leave "warm" for the baritones.

    cheers,
    DS.

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    Golf – Myrtle Beach

    Script:

    Great golf courses are found all across America, but few places can offer the variety and accessibility that golfers enjoy in Myrtle Beach, South Carolina. Many of the most celebrated names in golf have left their signatures in Myrtle Beach on courses ranked among "America's Best".

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BrianDuchnak's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Overall tone was monotonous.Sounded like you were just reading from script. For this type of product, voice needs to be more upbeat.

    Peer Feedback:

    IMO I think you should sound more naturally convincing with enthusiasm that Myrtle Beach is the place for golfers!!

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    World Of Warcraft III: Reign Of Chaos

    Script:

    Old Man: (voice-over) We never paid any heed to the ancient prophecies. Like fools we clung to the old hatreds, and fought as we had for generations. Until the day the sky rained fire, and a new enemy came upon us. We stand now, upon the brink of destruction, for the reign of chaos has come at last.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DomCStudio's recording

    My primary concern is the sound of my "s" throughout the sentence. I want to know if I have a bad hiss. In addition, I want to ensure the volume settings are appropriate. Thank you in advance for your feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounding good! Your s's weren't obtrusive to me. Your calm and even tone was a good choice for the narration aspect of this piece. That said I'd be interested in a second version that took a more energetic/emotional route, maybe angry or bitter, as a variation. Rock on!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree... your S's sounded fine to me! Volume was good too.

    Peer Feedback:

    You did a great job and your voice fits the piece very nicely.
    There was a LOT of vocal fry which made you sound old (GOOD!), but also made it very hard to understand (the beginning at least) Try opening your mouth a bit more.
    It sounded a bit regional too...like southern Gandalf?
    I think that the end was much cleaner than the beginning. The end had more expression and more color. I think it was because you opened your mouth more but kept your grandpa voice. The s's weren't bad or distracting but the mumbling was a bit distracting. Most video games will have subtitles at the bottom, but just assume this one won't and I think the copy will clean itself up automatically. You have obviously been practicing!

    The following words were difficult to understand or mumbled:
    We (the first one)
    ...fought as we..
    destruction (sounded like de-shruk-chun)
    All the "and"s were a bit too modern slang "an" with the d dropped off abruptly.

    Overall this was a well done and brave well executed copy! I am super glad I got to hear it and thank you for letting us all critique your craft.

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    Best Western

    Script:

    You could win free Shell gas for a year at Best Western or one of thousands of great prizes in Best Western's Sleep and Win instant win game. Best Western the world's largest Hotel Chain, call 1-800-Western today.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

    Did two takes. I know there are a few mouth clicks here and there so please ignore that

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice energy on the first take! The pace feels slightly rushed especially with the "Best Western's Sleep and Win instant win game." where the words slightly blend together. A tad too much emphasis on "Best Western" but you are on the right track.

    Good Job & Keep Practicing
    Dominic Carlos
    Domcstudio

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, DomC.

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved the second take! I agree with DomC that the phrase "Best Western's Sleep and Win Instant win game" is where you want to focus on clarity. The "N" at the end of "Western's" is getting lost. You also need to hit the T in "today" a bit more too.

    The "Best Western" at the beginning of the second sentence is said with a bit too much of an upward inflection so that it starts to sound like a question.

    Good variety between the two takes! And I didn't notice the mouth clicks you mentioned much at all.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, jeanar2001.

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    Legos

    Script:

    My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that some day he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer ... I think he’s a creative genius ... and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do. LEGOS ... the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gspiehler's recording

    This is a take 2 incorporating feedback I got on the earlier "Legos" recording I posted. I learned how to use a noise filter and applied it to this recording, so please let me know if you still hear any background noise. I also adjusted the performance based on feedback. Thank you for listening!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! I think a bit more energy and happiness would be even better.

    As for the recording quality, I can hear small echoes. Nothing major, though. And there are a few pops, so try not to record too close to the mic. A pop filter should really help. I can hear some artifacts. It's as if you used too much noise reduction. Maybe the background noise was too high before you applied the noise reduction. Or maybe it's the program that you used. I think iZotope Audio Editor is a great program to use. The "De-noise" plugin really comes in handy, of course, if you can afford the program.

    Anyway, I hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not sure I'm hearing room noise -- there is some small amount of distortion which reminds me of mp3 compression artifacts at very low bit rates. do you know the format of your output file? if mp3 (most likely) what is your bit rate? I suggest using 192k or higher bit rate.

    comment on performance: I really liked it! seems very competitive to me. You sound very natural and like a young mom. Maybe the pace was a little slow. I think a director would have do another one at a faster pace.

    nice job,
    DS.

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    Legos

    Script:

    My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that some day he’ll be doing great things. Right now, he’s already an architect, a designer, an engineer ... I think he’s a creative genius ... and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there’s just no limit to what he can do. LEGOS ... the creative diversion that helps develop a child’s potential.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gspiehler's recording

    I am brand new and still learning how to use my microphone and recording software. I am using Reaper for my DAW. I have been told my recordings are soft, and I have been trying to figure out how to fix the volume. Is this loud enough? Did you hear any background noise? How is the performance? This is my first try and I really want to learn to do this right, so be honest! Thank you for your time!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ginger,

    I do hear a little bit of noise in the background. I'm a newbie myself, but I'll offer what I can - other than isolating your recording setup more, most DAWs should also have a noise reduction effect/feature. You'll need a few seconds of just noise that it can use as a "noise profile," and then you can apply it to the whole recording.

    As for the performance, I might find some different ways to emphasize a few key words. It sounds like a great start to me with "My child has quite an imagination," but I might emphasize "great" in "my child will be doing great things." And then coloring all of the words like "architect," "designer," "engineer" so that each one has its own character - almost like you're imagining the things that your child has done to merit each title. Then "I think he's a creative genius" can be a bit more of your own prideful commentary, like "these are all the things that he's done, but - here's what I think..." Lastly, I think you can hit "Legos" a bit more the first time you say it. Maybe emphasize the first syllable instead so it stands out a bit more.

    Hope this helps, good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Seth! That really helped. I didn't know about noise filters, so I will learn how to do that! And I like your tips for the performance too. I am recording an updated version with noise filter and change in performance and will post it soon.

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    Audi :30

    Script:

    Everyday, the world gets more complex.
    And this is what inspires us to create new technology.
    Technology that connects us to everything the world has to offer, and vice versa.
    Technology that makes lightweight stronger, safer and faster than ever before.
    Technology that makes electric electrifying, and efficiency exhilarating.
    Technology that doesn't just drive us, but drives progress.
    And driving progress is what we do every day at Audi.

    49 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sethgrondin's recording

    I'm in the training program with Edge, and this is my first time submitting a recording for feedback. I know a few things myself that I might do differently, but please feel free to let me know what you think. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a good, strong delivery. It felt a little "halting" in places. I'm feeling like I want a bit more "variety" in your delivery. Overall, good read, great voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    very strong voice. IMHO, very marketable.
    but the read is WAY too stiff sounding. Like you're reading at gunpoint.

    Here's another suggestion: with so much strength in your voice, you should try to speak into the mic at 50% (or 75%) of your natural volume, but still sounding perfectly natural. This leaves yourself lots of overhead reserved for special phrases or effect, and it forces your to relax more.

    at least, that's the hope,
    DS.

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    2014 Buick Enclave
    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center air bag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.
    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

    52 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear robinss@bellsouth.net's recording

    This is my second upload. I'm still very new, but would like feedback on my V.O. skills. I feel like I may have sounded rushed in the middle. Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You said it yourself, it seemed a little rushed but otherwise it was pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like how the read sounded relaxed at the beginning and end. You are right, the middle is a bit rushed, but I think you were trying to get in all the information. However, this sounds like it could be a TV spot, so the screen would probably be showing each feature that you are listing off and would need more than a second to show it. I would slow this part down, as it really has the "meat" of the read. Buick probably wants the audience to remember these cool special features, so I would really take my time on those features and make them sound irresistible. I think your voice is a good match for this commercial, keep up the good work! P.S. I am still new too!

    Peer Feedback:

    mikep1 and gspiehler, thank you both for your comments. Very helpful!

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    2 Virtual Tour/E-Learning Scripts

    Script:

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear BradBeadleJr's recording

    Try not to be unkind, I am an extreme beginner, but would LOVE some honest feedback. Do you think I need a De-esser? I did very little editing, no compression, wanted it to be as close to standing next to me as possible. What do you recommend?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi. Nice job! You have good diction (although I think I heard you "stumble" just a bit on the word "highlighted" -- sounded like "highlee-ited." You also had some slight pauses throughout the script. Keep up the practice! You have a nice voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought this was well done. You sounded just a bit tense (which I totally understand!) Since this is for the introduction of a tour, it would be nice if it sounded a bit more welcoming. Maybe add a bit more warmth and happiness to your voice like you are genuinely glad the guests are there, which will make the guests glad they are there too. Good pacing, good pronunciation. I may have heard a small stumble on "click the subtopic" but overall well done!

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    Loving Kindness Meditation

    Script:

    May all beings be happy.
    May they be joyous and live in safety.
    All living beings, whether weak or strong,
    In high or middle or low realms of existence, Small or great, visible or invisible,
    Near or far, born or to be born,
    May all beings be happy.
    Let no one deceive another nor despise any being in any state. Let none by anger or hatred wish harm to another.
    Even as a mother at the risk of her life
    Watches over and protects her only child,
    So with a boundless mind should one cherish all living things. Suffusing love over the entire world,
    Above, below, and all around, without limit,
    So let one cultivate an infinite good will toward the whole world.

    49 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Skystoryteller's recording

    I'd like feedback on the quality of my voice, my diction, pronunciation, and problems with the recording quality. No added effects or normalization. I plan to use part of this in one of my demos so would like feedback on using it for that. Yes, I'm new at this - signed up on Voices.com a month ago. So, need to know what I need to work on. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    (sorry, this isn't a critique on the recording, but I have this to say:)
    First, a word about Voices(dot)com – cancel your membership IMMEDIATELY and try to get your money back. Not only is there very little chance of getting work, their (lack of) service is frankly appalling. No matter how meticulously you fill out your profile or complain to their customer service, you will often receive auditions that don't fit you, and you will not have access to every job (unless you pay for their $2500 Platinum membership).
    Since 2015, VDC has been infamous for stealing from talent fees. You can still see this today by finding the same job posted on Voices and other websites. Guess which site pockets 40–90%?
    Here is an interview from former Edge Studios managing director, Graeme Spicer, with Voices CEO David Ciccarelli. (https://voicescomplaints.wordpress.com/)
    Most of it is David spewing his marketing BS, but when confronted, he doesn't deny anything.
    For more testimonials, here's a (far from complete) list:
    http://www.bryansaint.com/voices-com-reviews-major-update/
    http://www.debbiegrattan.com/blog/hiring-voice-over-talent-online-hidden...
    https://www.marcscottcoaching.com/did-voices-com-just-take-a-92-5-commis...
    http://www.nethervoice.com/2015/08/26/voices-com-is-slapping-members-in-...

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi. You have a good voice. The pace was slightly slow (for me). A bit more energy throughout would keep it interesting and entertaining. I second pscoldfire's opinion regarding Voices.com. I took Edge Studio's Marketing 101 webinar and the instructor spoke out strongly against Voices.com. He did have high praise for Voices123 though. Good luck!

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    American Cancer Society 3

    Script:

    Ask one of the 3 million Americans who’ve survived cancer, if the money spent on research is worth it. Please help.

    61 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vivradlein's recording

    I'm still tinkering with the sound by lowering the volume and not being too close to the mic. How does it sound? I've tried a softer approach with my delivery as well. What do you think? Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    The softer approach works really great for the delivery! The pause in between "cancer and "if" was a little too long, but that is an easy fix. From my headset I think the noise floor is a little high and at the end of the recording I can hear some shuffling of clothes. The tone and pitch matched perfectly with the project though! Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree that the soft approach is better. It does sound a bit, airy? I'm also new at this so I wonder if it is the proximity to the mic that is picking up the breaths in the words. The volume is plenty loud, so I wonder if you would notice a difference if you recorded with your mouth just a bit further away from the mic. That might also reduce the shuffling or clothes that the previous comment noted. Performance was very good!

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    Jupiter's Lightning Bolts

    Script:

    Jupiter’s lightning bolts are stronger than anything we’ve witnessed on earth, and the resulting chemical reaction unleashes unimaginable riches -- the lightning transforms the elements into diamonds. As the diamonds are zapped into existence, they begin to descend through the atmosphere towards the core, racing to higher and higher pressures and temperatures. When they hit 14,400 degrees, they melt, creating a shower of liquid diamond raindrops.

    47 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate your thoughts!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your enunciation was crystal clear, good job! There was a tad too much emphasis on the word diamond, but the pace matched well with the projects educational elements. I heard mouth noise as well, which I deal with constantly. One tip that helped me was to eat a green apple before recording and drinking tons of water. Your doing great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Steph! This was really good. The volume was slightly low, but otherwise, your diction was great. You kept my interest throughout your read. Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steph -
    I'm not sure where you wanted to go on this one. It's a very "Discovery Channel" sounding excerpt - but you read it like your audience is school children...a very valid approach; to make science more accessible to kids, for instance.

    Regardless of the audience, the pace is too slow to hold the listener's attention. That would be my only critique. If you read this faster, and kept the inflections, it will sound completely different.

    hope that's helpful,
    DS

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    Alaska Travel Commercial

    Script:

    Get the hottest book from the coolest state. It's FREE! Alaska - the people, the places, the beauty. It's like nothing you've ever experienced before. Alaska. Beyond Your Dreams. Within Your Reach.

    43 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear QuiceStraughter's recording

    Did three takes this time. On the third take, I tried to sound more dreamy.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the last one the best " good pacing"

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, mikep1.

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    Bible Adventure Club

    Script:

    Do yo remember Noah...with his Arch, full of animals?
    Of course you do, because they're some of the greatest stories of all time.

    ...Introducing, The Bible Adventure Club: a collection of Bible stories that come to life, in the newest, most exciting multi-media package ever offered.

    Each story takes your child on an unforgettable journey, and the read-along CD's help build reading skills.

    These completely interactive CD-Rom's are filled with computer games, puzzles and other fun filled features for kids, so that they get caught up in the stories again and again.

    The Activity Adventure Book that accompanies each story delivers countless hours of creative fun. Your kids will use their imagination, to make and bake and build and draw things that you've never even thought of.

    The whole family will love The Bible Adventure Club...and you'll love what it does for your kids.

    Act now and you'll also receive the helpful Parent's Guide, filled with great ideas and tips.

    49 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LivingColor's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality was very good. I enjoyed your energy, enthusiasm and sincerity, without going over the top. You certainly convinced me to join the Bible Adventure Club. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    This is lovely! I loved your enthusiasm and the smile that played through -- nice choice of tone and use of pitch range. My favorite moment was the "make and bake and build and draw" sentence. I think you could highlight the first mention of the Bible Adventure Club a little more -- put it on a pedestal, so-to-speak -- but that's my only real note. I think the calm, gentle approach you chose works well for this particular product. Nicely done!

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear charmon's recording

    Hi! I am just looking for some feedback on my commercial demo that was wonderfully produced by Edge Studios. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    This was fantastic! I loved all the commercials! I can't think of a thing that I would change! Wonderful production!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds very professional to me, Congratulations

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a great demo! Very energetic and upbeat sounding! Lovely voice! Good luck to you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Outstanding demo. Truly professional. You have a likable and lovely voice. The best of luck to you!

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    Sam Adams TV Spot

    Script:

    At Sam Adams we salute those people who did that thing, built that thing, tried that thing, messed that thing up, then tried it again. For all the people who believe in going for it, failing, improving, who do their thing the same way we do ours. Because life isn’t about whether your glass is half full or half empty; it’s about filling it up. Sam Adams, fill your glass.

    59 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Putting my mouth where my critique is again. This is fun copy. Just had to give it a go.

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    Peer Feedback:

    hmmm. I'm reading the script as the word "that" should be hit, with a sequence of silly classic fails - not related to beer brewing or each other. The fails are the comic element. Like the elgranmartino read.

    The line, " For all the people who believe in going for it, failing, improving, who do their thing the same way we do ours." seems to explicitly juxtapose other people's "thing"s with Sam Adam's "thing" - brewing. They do their thing the same way we do ours.

    Cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Different interpretation, I suppose.

    The couplet of the words "that thing" three times seems less important than the five different actions associated to whatever particular "thing" that's being talked about.

    Of course, the visuals would be the final arbiter.

    Peer Feedback:

    James -
    I just saw this spot on TV last night, and thought I would report back.
    In the existing TV commercial, either "actions" or "things" were emphasized alternately within the list. Interesting. The comic aspect was focused on the level of effort to do something, or the object itself. The inflections were all over the place.

    we were both half right...lol.

    cheers!
    DS/

    Peer Feedback:

    Hmmm. Haven't seen the spot. gonna see if I can find it on YouTube.

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    Sam Adams TV Spot

    Script:

    At Sam Adams we salute those people who did that thing, built that thing, tried that thing, messed that thing up, then tried it again. For all the people who believe in going for it, failing, improving, who do their thing the same way we do ours. Because life isn’t about whether your glass is half full or half empty; it’s about filling it up. Sam Adams, fill your glass.

    51 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear elgranmartino's recording

    Does my delivery fit the comedic tone of the copy?

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    Peer Feedback:

    OK. Think about this.

    Sam Adams does one thing. They brew beer. (Yes, they brew different kinds of beer. But for the sake of argument, let's just concentrate one thing - beer.)

    So, what would happen if the "things" mentioned before was just one thing? Say, a building or a corporation or a cake?

    Use the "action" words rather than the repeated nouns for emphasis. Then you don't have to "pull the funny" - it's built in.

    Sound quality is good.

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    MorroconOil Moisture Repair Shampoo

    Script:

    We all experience hair damage. From daily cleansing, hot tools, chemical treatments, and sun exposure, your hair goes through a lot. The outcome? Dry, dull, weak and frizzy strands. Repair damaged hair with Morccanoil Moisture Repair Shampoo. Moroccanoil. Good hair means never settling.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lbroom528's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129403/script-recording-99621.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I definitely liked the recording quality and I thought the delivery was quite good. Since this is for a hair product, I would suggest that you make the delivery sound a bit more friendly and conversational and less instructional, like you're talking to your good friend and saying, "You have bad, frizzy hair? Pfff! Tell me about it! So do I." I hope that's helpful.

    Peer Feedback:

    How would you persuade your best girlfriend to try this stuff to solve her hair problems?

    There's a saying one of my coaches uses. "Tell me, don't sell me."

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the read and the pace, but it felt a little stiff. Let it relax a little more.

    does that make sense?

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, all. I agree it needs to be more conversational. Since I "wrote" the commercial, I think I'll add a bit to it and then modify how I approach the script. For some reason, I can't "relax" in front of the mic!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    1. Which take is your favorite and why? 2. Hear any mouth noise? 3. "s'S" too harsh? 4. My husband just finished my booth - how's the quality?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Amy: I'm new to voiceover, so can take my comments with that in mind. I liked the first take the best. Only mouth noise was maybe a little scratchiness like perhaps your mouth was dry or maybe you were outside your range. I thought the sound quality was very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    My 2c.

    You worked "refreshing" a little too hard on the first take. I heard you emphasize it without believing it yourself. Have you ever used this stuff? So, what's it like?

    On both takes, you dipped down in inflection on the product name. So you lost me. Say the product name with that same smile in your voice that you use for the last line.

    S's seem fine. Recording quality is very good. Your hubby should be proud.

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    Online Educational Website

    Script:

    [Conversational, teacher talking to student:]
    The chart said that after nine to fourteen days, the caterpillars enter the pupa stage. That's when they make a chrysalis (chrys·a·lis) and start metamorphosis. //

    [Neutral/educational tone:]
    Michelangelo was one of the most talented artists of the Italian Renaissance period. Although his painting of the Sistine Chapel's ceiling is well-known, he is most famous for his work with marble. The statue David is often considered to be Michelangelo's greatest work. //

    [youthful, friendly talking to a child:]
    Camouflage is an adaptation that helps animals blend in with their surroundings and stay safe. My favorite marine animal uses camouflage. Its back is covered in polka dots, which make it hard to see against the rocky ocean floor.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Three different reads for an educational website. Target audience is 8-10 year olds.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very clear and precise and still very pleasant and friendly, great work! You might consider speeding up the tempo just a tad for one of the more conversational pieces, which would help showcase a little more variety. Also, the first sentence of that first piece came across a little scold-y to me -- like "Aha, you didn't do the homework..." when I think something like "Oh, good question!" might play a little better. The third piece was the strongest for me -- you captured that youthful excitement in your tone and made me smile. Hope you book it!

    Peer Feedback:

    All readings were well done, and I'm a fan of your voice and tonal quality -- however I didn't hear any change in tone, voice, pacing or energy between the thee and all had different direction given - (conversational teacher, educational, youthful speaking to a child).

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    For legal reasons I can't upload the script. Any and all comments/critiques are welcomed and appreciated. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is a good lesson - on two fronts.

    First, for all of you newbies (and old hands) out there, NEVER publish an actual audition script. More often than not, now-a-days, auditions come with a NDA (Non-Disclosure Agreement). There is a lot of money riding on an ad campaign. You could be sued.

    Second. Notice the effective use of a breath. Most of the time, you will not hear breath sounds in a commercial VO - either TV or radio. But this natural "sigh" just fits the way Jerry is telling the story.

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    Script submitted by jerry lino

    Script:

    Today is the biggest day of Dan Maxwell's career. Unfortunately,a slow internet connection means Dan has to wing it. And Dan is not much of a winger. Dan, it's time for something different. Like super fast internet that's always with you when you need it. We're different because we're clear.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jerry lino's recording

    Any and all comments/critiques are welcomed and appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Always great stuff, Jerry.

    Only one caution I might offer. Those little "hitches" in the acting? One is good, Two, you might get away with. But more than that is kind of pushing it. Now, I'm hearing the "acting" instead of the message.

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    Creativity

    Script:

    Creativity is not the same as hard work or effort, it requires genuine inspiration. It is the product of a mind thoroughly intrigued by a question a situation or a possibility, therefore creativity does not come in exchange for money or rewards but when we focus our attention on something because we want to. 

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    There's plenty to critique in this one. I'd love to hear comments.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hearing just a touch of...room echo maybe?

    Also a couple of obvious hard edits. One after "effort" - the end got a little clipped off. The others after "question" and "situation". Maybe a noise gate? Dunno.

    Also sounds a little "hot".

    Peer Feedback:

    thanks for the comments James.
    recording level is limited to -3.1dB, (using a limiter). So I'm thinking it's not too hot.

    The echo is room noise from a new basement office area where I now record. I'm still conditioning it and adjusting treatment. More recent recordings are cleaner, but there's always the pursuit of perfection. I'm actually migrating completely away from a booth. I'm sitting at my computer desk with the mic on a scissor boom and record while reading copy from my iMac. And retakes and pickups are done at will. I love it.

    Funny thing is I've already done 3 paying jobs in this environment...it's amazing how clients are less attune to those production details.
    I'll have this place whipped in shape for a PBS gig on Tues. which is precisely why I value the comments.

    Your ear has always been sharp on edits - even ms of error (and big errors like clipping) I'll go back and take a look at those.

    thanks!
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave you did a great job! I like your sound too.

    I didn't hear the hard edit, but I did feel a touch too much pause between "..genuine inspiration." and "It is the .." . It was likely meant to be a dramatic pause (after reading about the PBS comment), and would have gone expertly with pictures.

    I agree with you, the echo isn't noticeable (it didn't stand out to me) for a short piece like this. I really enjoyed listing to it.

    I would have added some more eyebrow and facial excitement when delivering, "but when we focus our attention on something because we want to. ". I am however a girl and more prone to express emotions.

    PS. Thank you so much for the advice on background sniffling before/during my Puffs piece and I will practice preventing p's from being problematic ;)

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