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Script Genres > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

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    2012 Extinction

    Script:

    2012 Extinction
    The Maya, an ancient South American culture, predicted that time would end in a violent apocalypse on December 21, 2012. They created an elaborate astronomical calendar called "The Long Count," which stops abruptly in 2012. This date, which is also the winter equinox, coincides with an incredibly rare galactic alignment that happens once every 26,000 years. What did the Mayans think would happen when their calendar ended? And were they joined by other cultures--from different parts of the world and in different centuries--all pointing to 2012 as a calamitous end time? The Hopi Indians and Eastern Hindu share similar calendars, which are remarkably synchronous. One counter-culture mystic even uses an Ancient Chinese philosophy to unlock the key to a 2012 prophecy. Nostradamus himself suggests the world is headed toward a coming cataclysm. What can we do to head the warning of the Mayan apocalypse?

    81 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear divamom's recording

    Please comment on my delivery and the sound. Also if there are any issues of enunciation, pronunciation, etc. Thank you for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-162919/script-recording-108479.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Slow down a bit and tell a story :)

    Check pronunciation of "Maya" (like Myyy-a). Also, in the last sentence "head" - is pronounced like heed in that context, not head.

    All the best!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, I agree with Suzeek, slow down just a tad. Also, you have a bit of a long pause between "alignment" and "that.".

    And I think the way you did the last line sounds more like a statement rather than a question. Maybe "lift" the "e" at the end of Apocalypse to more effectively convey that you are posing a question?

    Other than that- good! :)

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    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Script:

    Script:

    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf
    Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    127 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-409/script-recording-29189.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Crystal! I love the dryness of your delivery here. Reading the script, I couldn't wait to hear it. With that dryness I can hear some of your humor but I'd love to hear more! I mean, let's face it, this is funny and the script makes that clear. Not "making fun of" but "Good grief, ladies, lemme help you out". It also felt a little bit slow to me but that might just be me. Feel free to take my comments with a grain of salt as I'm such a newbie but I wanted to jump in with my thoughts. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Since I live in Texas, I also recorded a version with a more "regional" accent but decided not to post it yet. I was trying to capture some of the humor but didn't want to push the envelope too far. Thanks for the tips, though. I'll try out your suggestions and see what happens.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm from Texas, too! I'd love to hear the regional version but I can see that might not be what one would go for in something like this. But bringin' the Texas sass without the accent would sound great!

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    I'm from Texas too...but given the script, I'm not sure I should say anything beyond that!

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    Oh, go ahead Tom. Get some sass in this forum.

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    Monday, Monday, I just might load up some sass and see what y'all think...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, Kristin, the the comments. I understand what you're saying and truly appreciate your help. Yes, I've been over-compensating and trying really hard to "do it right". I've not relaxed as I could and will continue practicing to relax in the reading more. As a tai chi instructor, I know what I should do--it's in the doing where I often stumble. Again, thank you for fitting and timely advice and encouragement.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the pacing is a bit too slow. Each word has an individual chance to breathe as there's a bit of a pause between each one when it wouldn't be that way in normal conversation.

    Example of how it sounded: "There...is a simple solution for...large-chested women."

    The ellipses are marking areas with unnatural pauses. Try a little bit of a faster pace by pretending you're talking to someone asking you for advice.

    "But my big boobs stop me from hitting the ball!"

    You step in as the voice of experience. You're confident because you've been there and you're about to tell her what works.

    Good volume. Good use of pitch change to hit "away" toward the end.

    Fun read choice!

    Peer Feedback:

    In fact, this is very sensible facts are provided by the author. I have been interested in research in the field of sports for a long time and together with https://dissertationhelp.org.uk/what-is-a-dissertation/ preparing the topic of research regarding golf. This will be my first dissertation and it is important for me to find a new discovery in the development of this sport.

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    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Script:

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    77 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    I was trying to have some fun while practicing so this is what I came up with. I figured the script sort of lent itself to some levity and I needed to finish out the day on the upbeat.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-409/script-recording-30651.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Crystal,

    This is a hilarious script, and I think you've definitely got the right tone for the read. I think the big thing that you should work on is trying to eliminate those spaces that you put in the middles of the phrases. I sympathize because I'm often guilty of the same thing haha. But I think if you can just make the read smoother overall, it could be really great. Good luck.

    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Crystal.
    Yes, good job with the light-hearted tone but watch out for the awkward gaps in the middle of phrases. Great example: "allowing......more room to swing freely." Work to eliminate those without increasing the rate significantly. Keep that smile/emotion.

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    A Story

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    119 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amina93's recording

    Ignore the audio quality, I'm working in a dorm room off of a dinosaur of a laptop :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97230/script-recording-85149.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice sound. Just remember to watch your pronunciation: the word temporal is pronounced temper-al not tem-poral.

    Peer Feedback:

    The proper pronunciation of "temporal" is TEM-per-ul not tem-PORE-ul.

    http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/temporal?s=t

    The word "every" appears five times. You stressed it 3 out of 5 times. I would suggest that, as a modifier, the word that comes after it is the more operative word to be stressed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow your voice is very good for a spot where you are storytelling or narrating as a young, enthusiastic boy or girl.

    I feel like this would benefit from adding more variety to your delivery when describing the ways that different cultures have told stories.

    I think the 'Incans' line lends itself to adding a little bit of a flair. Really paint the picture of shadows dancing against a stone backdrop with the vivid flames crackling away. Make the stars and spear sound a little more wondrous, far off or epic.

    Lastly I feel like the idea of making something eternal is really important and needs a little bit of emphasis as a result.

    Hope this helps! Keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to agree with JG54 about the pronunciation of the word temporal. The timing I think was fine as was the emoting of the story. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that's a great story. I was not the only one to ask how can I learn to write like this? https://artscolumbia.org/category/college-essays/ provides a wealth of examples for writing an essay. The fact is that in the university in all subjects there is a mandatory assignment with writing an essay as a verification exam

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    A Story

    Script:

    A Story
    Script:
    Every moment has a story. And every story matters
    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.
    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.
    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear divamom's recording

    Please comment on my delivery, pacing, sound, etc. Thank you for your time.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-162919/script-recording-108607.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like your voice for telling stories! Have you tried "pre-talking" before starting your script? As if you were telling someone you know? It helps give a natural delivery.

    The background sounded a little "hollow" or resonant at the beginning? Are you in an open room? Maybe use a closet with clothes or something to get a deader sound.

    Keep up the good work! Want to hear more!

    Peer Feedback:

    I would maybe slow down a bit...some parts, such as "chose the chisel instead" and the word "Aborigines" would sound more clear, and less rushed. Also, I would work on deadening the space where you are recording. Good luck : )

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    A Story

    Script:

    A story
    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    53 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear fpyne1's recording

    Performance feedback, please. :)

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think it was great, there seemed to be a small echo and sounds like you are in a room that may echo...the clarity was good you did have infliction but just perhaps a little more emotion to sound like you are telling not reading....overall it was good!! Thanks for sharing!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocally it was great. I like your take on the first half. The second half sounded a little more forced. Overall, it was good!

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    A Story

    Script:

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    Script from Edge Studio's 5,498 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

    78 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jenniferhbrent@gmail.com's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-154859/script-recording-105358.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Not bad, but there is room for improvement. One thing I noticed was that this recording sounded more like a reading, meaning it didn't sound natural or conversational, or at least not as much as it could. Another thing I noticed was that you also had glottal stops. I noticed it when you said "count", it was more like "coun". It's a small thing to fix, I do it too, but it's good to make yourself aware of it. Finally, I'm not sure what you're using to record, but you should be able to edit out any excess noise you make after recording, such as that rustling at the end. Keep practicing, but you're on the right track!

    Peer Feedback:

    hey there jennifer!! i'd cosign the above AND maybe add a suggestion to convey more feeling as you perform the script. with the shuffle at the end it feels like you were glads it's over, like mic drop i'm out and i'm done with all of it. try practicing this using a voice as if nobody knows what a "story" is. maybe like a group of kids listening. -Marv

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    A Story

    Script:

    A story
    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    96 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jrandy's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hiya.... I am a novice ..so I may not have the experience to provide accurate feedback. Anywho... I would alter the tempo and pitch at certain points in the script. Also, I would bring up the volume a bit. I also think you could be a little dramatic as this time period is quite exciting.

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    A Story

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    Script from Edge Studio's 5,498 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

    115 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Liked that read a lot. A pleasant voice. Your delivery kept me interested to keep on listening. Recording quality is good. Job well done

    Peer Feedback:

    'sunrise' really stood out to me in that it seemed to be followed by too long of a pause.
    'fleeting temporal' has the same issue.
    It's one thought but it sounds like "Fleeting temporal" is the end of a sentence when it's supposed to be one thought.

    You perfectly captured the 'dances with fire' line and used pitch to effectively communicate that these are really at the essence of human life. You gave "human life" the little touch of gravity it deserved.

    Really awesome stuff! Lots of subtleties in pitch where they needed to be.

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    A Story

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters. The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead. The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear. Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart.
    Stories take the fleeting temporal and make them eternal.

    72 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SarahCoble's recording

    I was going for smooth, engaging and kind of inspiring, as though the script was being delivered to a creative writing class. What do you reckon?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think its almost too smooth. Can you add a bit of variation even in the copy if this is yours? Also, check the pronunciation of temporal as your pacing seems off here. You have a truly unique sound and I look forward to hearing from you about a more specific subject that might lend itself to more vocal variation.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your accent, Smooth read, maybe changing the mood through your voice as you transition from one part of the story to the next. Hope this helps

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    112 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TJS's recording

    Hey guys please tell me how I did on this one and what you would change. Thanks in Advance!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Correct me if I am mistaken, but it appears that you are sitting down because I can hear the creaking of your chair. Once after "story", again after "stone walls", and at the end of the recording. And there are some places in the middle of sentences that could never be edited out without sacrificing the continuity of the narrative.

    There's also a lot of mouth noise, mostly lip smacking between sentences and before you inhale, and especially at the top before you even start speaking. And a little nasal click after "sunrise". You should practice keeping your mouth open at the end of a phrase and before you inhale - sometimes it is impossible, but often times not. That will cut down on some of the mouth noise.

    Need a tapped T on "moment" instead of just the glottal "momehnn"- sounds a little California Valley Girl, "Oh, no you dihnehn!"

    Watch "ih-ternal" for "ee-ternal"

    Your voice is well suited for narration, but you need to be more cognizant of the extraneous noises - chair noise, mouth noise and clicks. Some can be edited out and replaced with tone. And some diction or elocution could be cleaner and clearer.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank You so much. Your feedback is definitely going to be used! I really do appreciate it and anymore that can be given. Yes right now I do have a stool that is old and wooden haha but my plan is to replace it in my studio with something metal that makes no noise. Great ears to be able to hear that though! Where can I get ears to hear all that?! Hahaha

    Thanks so much again.

    Peer Feedback:

    TJS ---
    I'm in complete agreement on James' critique. that's gold, btw.
    so, enunciation - lots of opportunity to polish up, but don't make it sound mechanical.

    The pace or editing seemed choppy - IMO, you should tighten that up.

    the recording quality itself sounded pretty good to me in headphones. no discernible room noise or other artifacts. James mentioned the clicks.
    So, most of the critique is performance itself.

    but it did hear the chair creaking! lol. Maybe switch to a stool..!

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    All you need to do is turn up the volume to your headset (always edit with earphones on) and look at the zoomed-in waveform to see the anomalies (little "blips" in the spaces between sentences). My mic is sensitive enough to pick up my growling stomach.

    A metal chair (even a wooden chair) might be worse, too reflective a surface, and metal can reverberate with odd harmonics that could show up in the recording. If you must sit (for long form narration and audiobooks), get a nice upholstered, well-oiled office-type chair (the cloth will not reflect sound and the oil will cut down on squeaking). But watch for the static charge that might occur, you could zap your equipment. For shorter pieces of copy (commercial copy, PSA's, etc.), it's better to stand so that you can be expressive with your entire body - it comes out in the read.

    Your recording environment seems to be fairly quiet - no echo. There is some low level ambient room tone (noise/hiss), but it is not that egregious. It might be taken care of with a noise elimination plugin or processing (depending on what DAW you are using).

    Peer Feedback:

    The 't' in moment was removed and the "H" sound after 'moment' seemed to get a little extra kick to it as a result.

    A lot of times verbs should be hit or emphasized in some way. A word like 'painted' may benefit from a bit of pitch change. You want to sell that these are unique and different ways of storytelling so you have to give each a little bit of a different delivery.

    Some unnaturally long pauses throughout the read. After 'fire' for instance.

    Most of the pacing and volume seemed right.

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    83 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Yvonne Lynch's recording

    I would like feedback on my sound quality and my read - thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not an expert on sound quality so take this with a grain of salt. Listening with my headphones I can hear a lot of static (but don't hear it w/o headphones?). It cuts out for a moment 10 seconds in and then comes right back. Not sure how that could be happening. Double check all your connections. Analyzing the three seconds the static cuts out, I'm hearing a touch of reverb. Anything you can do to help absorb the sound in your recording space will help.

    Good read. Be careful to stay true to the script. You said "a" chisel instead of "the" chisel.

    Great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    There's definitely some kind of electronic interference in the recording. could be a bad cable or your mic and/or interface is too close to another electronic device.

    Also sounds like you're applying noise reduction which is pulling some of the natural frequencies from the voice, leaving it sound hollow and metallic.

    Difficult to troubleshoot without knowing your setup - mic, interface, computer, DAW, room, etc.

    Peer Feedback:

    i really like your voice however there's some serious feedback in your recording. I wonder if you were too close to the computer? i have had this problem in the beginning.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for comments - jesdoit1, you said you had feedback problems at the beginning, how did you deal with it?

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    A&e Fashion Special

    Script:

    If you're in the market to liven up your décor, here are some racy new items you can buy now to express your colorful side!

    Why not invest in functional art? Charlotte Beyorlin's geometric rugs blend swatches of velvet, suede, wool and leather to create a truly sensory delight.

    Fly away on this zany propeller stool. Aviation inspired legs support, an elegant velvet cushion, blending frivolity and form.

    Hand-stitched leather lamps can really lighten up a room. Mix and match the textured shades for a funky effect.Hang on to these fuzzy hangers from Domis. Unique bristles deter wrinkles and make a colorful addition to a bare closet.

    And here's another way to add some edge and comfort to your home. These authentic Tibetan lamp accessories are very hot among today's designers.

    56 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kate's recording

    My second script recording/upload to the Edge website. All feedback welcome. Kate

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7330/script-recording-30729.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    One thing I would mention is that the read feels a bit "scripted," meaning that it doesn't feel natural. Try to relax a little more and sound more personal. Your stiffness is also noticeable in the flow of the piece.

    That being said, you have a great voice for this. I feel like with a bit more confidence in you, you could really sell this stuff to anyone with a wallet. Good job, and keep on going!

    Peer Feedback:

    Kate - great clear voice, just a couple of wee suggestions. Vary the pace and the tone a bit more - each object is so different from the previous one - zany stools and Tibetan lamp accessories did get the same tone. Perhaps a hint of a wink in your voice at the beginning to let us know this isn't your ordinary furniture accessory ad.
    Looking forward to hearing more from you - super job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You hit the words racy and colorful real nicely. I wonder if it might sound a bit better if the playfulness you brought to those words (which was very good!) could be extended to the surrounding words. As it stands I like that you emphasized those words but they stand in a bit of a stark contrast compared to the rest of the sentence in an off way.

    Your reading of suede, wool, leather could use a little variety. Add in some pitch changes to liven up the reading of a list.

    Playful is a great way to describe this script and you nailed it on some lines but a lot of sections of the script drag without that same tone. Just try to keep that tone consistent throughout and I think you've got an amazing read!

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    A&E Fasion Special

    Script:

    If you're in the market to liven up your décor, here are some racy new items you can buy now to express your colorful side!

    Why not invest in functional art? Charlotte Beyorlin's geometric rugs blend swatches of velvet, suede, wool and leather to create a truly sensory delight.

    Fly away on this zany propeller stool. Aviation inspired legs support an elegant velvet cushion blending frivolity and form.

    Hand-stitched leather lamps can really lighten up a room. Mix and match the textured shades for a funky effect.Hang on to these fuzzy hangers from Domis. Unique bristles deter wrinkles and make a colorful addition to a bare closet.

    And here's another way to add some edge and comfort to your home. These authentic Tibetan lamp accessories are very hot among today's designers.

    91 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Keli O's recording

    I am new at this and just using my iPhone to record, so please disregard recording quality. Any feedback would be much appreciated. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-169660/script-recording-108118.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    it was a bit too fast and one could hear the parts where you were breathing in. vary your pitch and tone. 'hang on' sounded abit unsure. 'very hot among todays designers' was good toning.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the comment that you were too fast and need to slow down but I liked your energy! I heard a few awkward pauses like before "Aviation inspired" and "blending frivolity" that made ir sound choppy and like the volume was going in and out.

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    Abiogenic Theory

    Script:

    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

    50 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ECT893's recording

    This is my first upload and I'm feeling a tad uncertain about it... Your input would be awfully helpful. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4510/script-recording-25305.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your articulation and annunciation stand out! But it sounds a little forced.
    Clearly you are reading. Relax! Your voice has a pleasant timbre.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're right on that one, Henry. This becomes increasingly apparent the more I hear scripts by other readers and the ease with which they deliver their material. The art of relaxing is going to be a long process for me to master... Hey, thanks for taking the time to comment!

    Peer Feedback:

    Its hard to get out of reader mode especially with a script like this. Try envisioning one person in front of you that you are explaining this to. That might help make it a little more personable.Good job

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    Abiogenic Theory

    Script:

    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

    101 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear RobSmith's recording

    This is for an UpWorks position I bid on. They are looking for inexpensive talent with skills for a new project with limited budget but if the right person is found and willing to be paid by "listens" to their English courses then it would become ongoing as they build the business. Does this sound like something you'd listen to if you were trying to learn a new language? I chose this script due to the complexity of the words and concepts being comparable to a new language. I had to look up how to pronounce it so it seemed appropriate to me. =)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-112746/script-recording-89160.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not all that familiar with UpWorks - had to Google them. If it's anything like Fiver, I myself would stay away from it. Only my opinion. I place a higher premium on my time and talent.

    As for the read:
    If I am understanding your description correctly, this is for a kind of "English As A Second Language" kind of thing? If that is so, then this script's subject matter is too dense, esoteric and complicated for someone who is trying to learn English. Something with simple everyday phrases and good grammar that can be universally useful might be more in line with their intent.

    If this is intended as an English Class, then grammar and spelling and sentence structure might be more appropriate - as boring as that may be. (My entire junior year of high school English class was taken up with diagramming sentences.)

    At any rate, the delivery is too fast. A scientist, marine biologist or some other academic may be able to absorb this material and these concepts without batting an eye, but an average layman listener will probably tune out after "accretion of solids" (basically, eating and getting bigger). Also, as a teaching tool, attention should be given to well articulated words and phrases. At this clip, some things got garbled and smushed together. So someone not that familiar with the English language may misinterpret. The big example here is, "regions of origin" - it's so fast and inarticulate, it sounds like one word. (In the German language, long compounded words are often used as a single entity. So a German hearing this may be confused as to what a "regionsovorigin" is.)

    So my answer to your question is, no. Best to KISS. Look for material in phrase book translations, directions and the like. Rosetta Stone is a good example of how to use proper and colloquial phraseology (and pace) to effectively teach the intricacies of learning a new language. If you, as an English speaking person, needed to research pronunciations for this piece of copy, how lost would you think a Non-English speaking person is going to be?

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    Aboigenic Theory

    Script:

    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear 's recording

    I haven't posted an E-learning script. Any comments welcome. Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Greetings,

    Solid read to my ears. Good pace, interpretation and energy. I also appreciate your phrasing through some fairly long sentences. Being very nit picky I would point out the lost word "and" in the last clause of the last sentence. Not a big deal.

    I seem to detect perhaps a little bass reflection in the audio. More bass trapping maybe? Or maybe my ears.

    Overall very well done.
    Best in the new year!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    I know sound's not great. Please just comment on performance. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Sorry, because I think I confused you with one of the ladies on the site when you critiqued my work, recently. It's because the two of you submitted recordings for the same piece in recent days and I got mixed up. Anyway, sorry!

    You missed the word "background". I liked the choice to ignore some punctuation, and I think that was a tricky spot that you handled very nicely. Very clear. Hard to comment on the quality of your voice with the recording quality so bad, so I'm not sure but you might warm it up a little?

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    Adopted Children Seeking Biological Parents

    Script:

    It is natural for an adopted child to be curious about their biological parents or siblings.

    By collecting as much background information as you can during the adoption process, you may be able to satisfactorily answer some of your child's questions.

    At least until they are old enough or able to get further information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear I M's recording

    No editing, no room treatment...just the voice (for what IT is worth!) Thanks in advance!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7555/script-recording-108470.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone and inflection, but there were a lot of pauses, so the recording felt somewhat choppy. Some breaths were not cut out. If you get a good flow going, I would say this is the perfect kind of script for your voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, rikaersh2...

    Best!

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    Adopted Children Seeking Biological Parents

    Script:

    It is natural for an adopted child to be curious about their biological parents or siblings. By collecting as much background information as you can during the adoption process, you may be able to satisfactorily answer some of your child's questions. At least until they are old enough or able to get further information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear linda.shortman's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-133593/script-recording-108217.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Linda,

    Awesome voice for this. I am new to VO. Here are the few things that i noticed... sounds like the reading was a little fast. Also I feel like you are not pausing long enough between your periods and commas.

    Sincerely,

    Kwency

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree...great voice, nice recording quality...just slow it down a tad.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there! Really nice voice, very clear. The read sounded a bit too fast for me, and maybe the pauses sounded like they were edited a bit too short in length.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Biological Parents

    Script:

    It is natural for an adopted child to be curious about his or her biological parents or siblings. By collecting as much background information as you can during the adoption process, you may be able to satisfactorily answer some of your child's questions. At least until he or she is old enough or able to get further information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MadDawg08's recording

    Any feedback (sound quality, sound level or performance) is appreciated. Thank you for listening!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-168271/script-recording-110633.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the performance and sound level. There sounded like a hum in the background. Maybe the mic is picking up from the computer hum.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think that you did a great job. I and my wife both listened and couldn't hear any hum in the background. The one suggestion I have is to smooth out the word 'satisfactorily'; you emphasize the 'tor' to where it almost sounds like a separate word. Quality is just fine to me!

    Peer Feedback:

    Only note I would give is to switch up the tone a bit to show a little more concern/resolution. Other than that, great job and the quality was great.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice genuine tone. Good sound quality as far as your voice on the mic goes.

    I agree with Michael King, there is some low level background noise that becomes apparent when you aren't talking (maybe it's your computer running, or the heat in your house is on). It's minimal but you can def hear it in headphones. I would suggest first using a high pass filter around 80hz or so. You can also experiment with a downward expander to lower your noise floor when you aren't speaking.

    Your performance was good! Be careful with tempo and choppiness. I thought your pace was solid most of the time, but you came screaming out the gate (first three words especially). You read smoothly until it comes to punctuation. Big pauses on both periods, the comma, and even after "old enough" where there is no punctuation. You may also consider giving a little more emphasis to the descriptor words - for example, see how it sounds when you hit "biological" instead of "parents".

    Cheers,
    Adam

    Peer Feedback:

    This is all great feedback, thank you!

    Thank you especially Adam - this is very helpful! I've done some more sound-proofing since this recording, but I'm not very familiar with the technical aspects of audio cleanup (beyond "Noise Reduction" in Audacity). Any recommendations on where I can learn more as it pertains to voiceover?

    Regarding performance, I can definitely hear it now that you point it out. That gives me some things to work on. Thank you, this is very valuable and very much appreciated!

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows.

    Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations.

    This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    This is a re-recording of this script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87112.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I went back and listened to your previous recording of this and found the general tone preferable to this one. What was missing from that one was the amount of "voice" you put into this one - that one was a little too subdued.

    I can hear the edits in this one.The overall "flow" is a bit broken up by them.

    Watch the long A sound when "uh" would sound more (say it with me) conversational.

    Also, some of the emphasis on certain words seems a little off, as far as script analysis and messaging goes. For instance: The second sentence in the first recording, the emphasis on "grows" seems a better choice than the emphasis on "child" in this take - the messaging is clearer. And even though this is a serious, heart string tugging subject, there's no reason that it can't be delivered with a positive smile like a pastor might.

    A little mouth noise here and there, especially toward the end.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87061.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording was fine -- clear and noiseless.
    The performance, to me, lacked vitality. You didn't seem passionate or enthusiastic about this topic. Also, the delivery was too slow and had too many pauses.
    I would dearly love to hear your re-recording of this copy, pretending you were telling this to your best friend and sounding as if this was personally meaningful to you.
    Your voice: yum. very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    @leawms
    thank you for the feedback
    I will try to muster up some more emotion, I didn't want it to be a tear-jerker, and even tried to imagine it being played on tv, and I was talking to my granddaughter's stuffed owl (trying to focus on talking to "one" person)

    I will be rerecording this script.
    Again, thank you for YOUR TIME in giving feedback.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Trying some acting things along with trying to continue to make strides in Neutral American with no regionalisms!! Thanks Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Adopted Children.L.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jeff, your comment makes me wonder what your natural regional accent is, because I couldn't pick up on anything -- so great job there! And a nice clean, steady read overall. My wish for your performance was that you had more warmth... as you're talking about kids (even in an instructional way), I wonder if you experimented with anything more touchy-feely emotional. Perhaps that was a choice you made? Good job again on the dialect.
    -b.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very, very good. The only New York-area regionalisms I heard was the first "their" (the final "their" was spot on), the "d" in "during" was pronounced as a [dz], basically a [j], and the "i" in provide had a slight diphthong issue. Most Americans say [ai], but the "it" in this recording sounds like [awi]. I'm not sure if I'm identifying it correctly, but it was slightly noticeable. Maybe other listeners can help me out.
    I say good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi bex!
    Thanks for the thoughts! I actually tried to get away from the Mr. Warmth thing because my last 5 reads all were starting to sound the same and that was the one consistant thing I kept hearing... So I guess it worked??? Hahaha!!!
    I'm happy you didn't detect any regionalism... Been working really hard on minimizing it! Thanks!!!!
    Hope to hear you soon!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Nick!!!!
    GREAT EARS!!!!
    You are dead on!!!! thanks for the help I'm still working on it but you picked out all the right words!!!
    Thanks for your help!!!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read! good sound quality. Can not really hear any regionalisms in there.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

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    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-54147.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice solid read. On their own sounded a tad off. Otherwise the the kind of read that wouldn't turn anyone away. Good show.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Richurd. Funny - can't get anything past you - I edited in "on their own". Haha. Should have just kept what I originally had!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marianne, I thought your performance was great - it was friendly, conversational, and informative. The pacing was smooth as well, yet you still managed to stress the right words and came in at right under 30 seconds. Very good! Punching in words and phrases is tricky, but you'll master it with practice. Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks much Javier!

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    Read with crystalline clarity.

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    great inflection. sounded really good. nice recording.
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    I completely bought your interpretation of that. Nice one. Love your contest entries too, I've been busy producing and haven't entered in a little bit. But that's good too ;) You rock
    Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi - mwjmc, dfsaund and Nodo420 - thanks so much for your kind words. Keeps me motivated to stay with it! Marianne

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    My 3rd take, of this script - trying to incorporate the suggestions of my fellow voice actors. Would also appreciate any critique on the technical end, trying to improve the recording space/edits. In advance thank you - you are appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87313.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Charles,

    You have a folksy type of voice, although you are a little rushed. I also find my self doing the same thing. Picture your audience and talk to them or Him or She. You are explaining to them the directions be concise, but let them follow along.

    Peer Feedback:

    @marysboy1 not to seem ignorant, but I guess in this case I am... what is a "folksy" voice? I've never heard that description before.

    Hmmm, I didn't "feel" rushed and previous takes had longer pauses which according to others didn't necessarily need to be there and if they did they could easily be increased post, so I read this one with minimal pauses.

    Stay-tuned for 'take 4'.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    This is my re-record of this script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87119.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Much better pacing than the previous recording.

    Two obvious things to be aware of:
    - Again, the long A sound.
    - Breathing in the middle of a sentence - which sometimes can be edited out.

    One thing you may do with scripts like these is to visually re-format them to trick your brain into going step by step. For instance, how would you have tackled it if it looked like this:

    - To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit OFF, then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping.

    - Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap.

    - Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap.

    - Insert the complete cap into the air purifier.

    - Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow, and then switch the unit back ON.

    - Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation.

    - Either choose REPEAT to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

    Now each "idea clump" is a separate entity and it is also more obvious where you can separate the ideas and breathe (to be edited out in post).

    I use this trick all the time to further clarify what the "idea clumps" are and where it's important to give slight pauses for emphasis or to allow the listener to react. It also forces me to propel those "idea clumps" on one breath so they don't get busted up into fragments.

    Peer Feedback:

    @jamesromick thanks a ton - I'll be using your suggestion. Sorry I haven't responded to your critique more timely... back on the road in the 18 wheeler, sometimes time just gets away from me - you are (and the so many others who participate) appreciated. Again Thanks

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    Air Processor 2000

    Script:

    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87062.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Way too slow. You sound bored by the entire script so the listener will feel the same.. This is not an interesting or exciting script so a big part of your job is to make sure the listener does not fall asleep before it is over. You are actually supposed to care about what you are saying so the listener feels it is important. This is no more than 40 seconds of script, not 1:03.

    So, try it much faster, with enthusiasm obvious in your voice. The line "Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation." is exciting and good news for example. Sound happy about it. It smells nice. Wow!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok cool I understand I was kind of torn between doing it fast and also well if this is a instructional then the person is probably going to try to follow along so I was trying to give person enough time to follow what I was saying with what they were doing so... point well taken, thanks Tom.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with Tom, it is a bit plodding. Take a clue from the last sentence. If whoever is watching this missed a step, they can go back or play the whole thing over again.

    Watch breathing in the middle of a sentence. It is a natural thing in "conversation" but not so much when offering instruction. A process has to be clear and concise without being broken up. However, it still has to be somewhat "conversational" in that we normally don't use the long A sound but rather the shorter "uh" sound, as in "uh new capsule."

    Did you imagine what the video might look like? Can you see yourself performing these steps while describing them to someone (one single person)? It would flow more smoothly. You might even physically pantomime the steps as you describe them into the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I get your concern about the video, and maybe it will run for even longer than 1:03. That's really the job of the editor to fit the audio to the video. Each of the sentences need to be spoken at proper speed (as directed), inflection and enthusiasm. The editor will stretch as much as needed by simply increasing the space between sentences. Without seeing the video the audio track alone would sound strange. Choppy at best, but.each sentence will sound natural on its own.

    Peer Feedback:

    @Tom Lennon...
    RIGHT!!! I guess I didn't consider the fact that they could edit the timing according to the video - (brrrr-duh!) and I was trying in my minds eye visualizing the video playing so maybe thats why some hesitation on my part... I knew it wasn't a super good read or even a really good read.

    All points are well taken! Thank you all. From now on I'll try to discern whether this script is one that will have some post editing done to it and just try to convey the message. I was also a little concerned about any technical issues. My recording space is basically in the middle of my apartment in a very busy traffic laden area, in the past I was getting lots of feedback concerning the noises, so hopefully I've reduced those to an acceptable level.

    Again, thanks for the feedback. I will be rerecording this script.

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    Air Processor 2000

    Script:

    Air Processor 2000
    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear divamom's recording

    Please comment on the delivery, pace, sound, and anything else that you think might help me. Thank you for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-162919/script-recording-108631.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd say be careful on the pauses at the end of sentences because they made the recording sound choppy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there. Good work.

    Your delivery is very monotone. It sounds like you are strictly ordering the listener on what he/she should do. Yes, that's pretty much what the script is. But I guess you can add more warmth to the delivery. Smile! :D

    The read was also fast. Lots of info being delivery rapidly. Try recording yourself with a slower read and see how that sounds.

    The recording quality needs work, as well.

    Keep it up! :D

    Peer Feedback:

    Instructional readings can be tough to not sound too monotone. Try to slow down and pretend like you are explaining it to a friend in the same room as you are in.

    Nice work, keep going!

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    Air Processor 2002

    Script:

    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EstieWhite's recording

    This is my first time on Feedback Forum. All thoughts are appreciated. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-146238/script-recording-106418.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Estie!
    There is a low hum in the background. You can hear it when you first start your audio. Depending on what DAW you're using, there should be a preset that will help you remove that hum. A good way to do that is to start your recording by saying something like "start"....and then remain perfectly still for a few seconds. Let the mic pick up any room noise and low freq hum....then say "stop". Capture the room noise and, if your DAW has a noise reduction present, use it to capture the noise print, and then apply it to the entire file when you record. It sounds more complicated than it really is, but it will make difference in your audio.

    Your voice is very nice! You did, however, sound a little like you were reading the copy. Think about how you would tell your best friend how to replace the capsule in the air purifier, and try to work on emulating that sound when you deliver the copy. This is something most of us struggle with to some extent. So don't worry...you're not alone!

    Good luck! ~Rich

    Keep practicing! You've got a nice voice, and

    Peer Feedback:

    Oops....fat fingered the keyboard. I HATE when that happens. Any who...you've got a nice voice and some good pacing. Keep it up! ~Rich

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    Air Processor

    Script:

    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Grayson Denley's recording

    Playing around in different narration niches. Going for an instructional feel, maybe like a YouTube video. Thanks for any and all feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-170259/script-recording-110230.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job Grayson. Sounded like you were hired for the gig. I cannot think of anything you didn't do well. I had a hard time hearing the word "arrow" but I think that was more my ears just missing it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very cool voice. Consider if you were showing your grandmother how to change this air purifier capsule. I think you'd probably have the same nice and slow directional approach, but with a smoother, more conversational, and less robotic tone. Even though this is straight forward copy, it should still sound human and be relatable for the listener/learner.

    For instructional copy like this you'll want to be especially articulate. Some of the "cap"s started sounding like "cab", and often the last word in the sentence drops off. I also noticed you missed the first "cap" altogether.

    Audio-wise, it seems like your recording space may need a little love. Sounds like your big voice is stuck in a small box, which is a common problem for vocal booths (inherently small boxes that need treatment to not sound like it). You have a great natural gravitas, give it the space it deserves! You also have quite a bit of mouth noise in this recording. You can try de-clicker plug-ins, or manual touch ups to remedy this. You can also look up techniques to lessen mouth noise before you get in the booth.

    Cheers,
    Adam

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    I am posting this in response I gave to a fellow member here. Kind of putting my money where my mouth was with regard to the feedback. I'd appreciate yours, I was working on putting the phrasing together in such a way as to make it interesting. Only post production was, dc correct, de noise, removed a breath or 2 and cut the empty space to fit.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-26942.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well done, Nodo

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    I am just starting out...the sound quality was clean. The tone and pace were great "convince no one" might have used more impact. Hope this helps
    MB

    Peer Feedback:

    I think if you record yours with similar phrasing and low key inflection until the end, it will sound better than this. Keep at it brother! The fun is in the practice! Well, that and getting a paid gig from time to time! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    WOW! I felt like I was actually attending a lecture! What I also liked about this was your pacing, as it began somewhat calm as a normal lecture would begin and then you compelled and captivated the audience by the emotion used. Please continue giving us great reads! Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your only real fault you didn't pronounce "artificial." It's been good working with you all.

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    DOH! Henry, great ear... I completely missed that! I am going to have to do a bit more quality control on my readings! DRAT!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Nodo, sounded pretty good to me. The first thing I noticed was that it sounded like you edited some of the sentences together(maybe picking the best takes). Is that the case? Let me know because I am also working on training my ear for different things to help better my reviews and my self direction.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very strong read, Nodo. This would keep my interest as a narration. Better than my own attempt at it. If you are focusing on the phrasing, it might be interesting to look at Solzhenitsyn's original words, which are different than this script. Look about halfway down page 2 of his speech on the Nobel prize website (http://www.nobelprize.org/nobel_prizes/literature/laureates/1970/solzhen...). Here it is:
    "But a work of art bears within itself its own verification: conceptions which are devised or stretched do not stand being portrayed in images, they all come crashing down, appear sickly and pale, convince no one. But those works of art which have scooped up the truth and presented it to us as a living force - they take hold of us, compel us, and nobody ever, not even in ages to come, will appear to refute them."

    The original text seems even trickier to regulate to me. The only edit in your recording that I could hear was the cut that came after "turned into images".
    David

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks David, and thanks for the link. Wow, that thing is LONG. I actually like the original text better, sounds more, I don't know, majestic. I may give that one a run. Not the whole darn thing though! Thanks a lot for your comments and the research, Can't wait to hear new scripts from all of you!

    Peer Feedback:

    I wish I had used that script!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Beverly Ann's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Allstate Insurance for Feedback Forum.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it sounds very nice. Your voice is very reassuring and friendly. Two little nitpicks: "And now" needs to be more fluid - don't pronounce the "d" of "And." And the pause after "However" is a bit long.

    Peer Feedback:

    A little bit of mouth noise. There's something about the "a" in "damaged", "can't" and "damages" that belies some regionalism (Cleveland? or Chicago?). And "...you can take..." was contracted to "you c'n take".

    This has been mentioned a few times by some other people. I don't know what the "rule of thumb" is on this forum, but most posters don't slate their spots, they just dive into the copy. If you've posted the copy, we're reading along. I think the first line is just a typo (All State Insurance is also a typo) and isn't part of the body of the copy - just it's title. No need to slate it, it adds nothing to the actual read.

    Hard to put my finger on it, but I miss the celebratory nature of the copy. It's like a graduation or a new baby. This should sound like a really big deal. This was just sort of a pat on the back.

    The emphasis on "YOUR home" and "YOU'LL be covered" sounded odd to me, because you've already congratulated me (YOU just bought...). So, I think the more operative words are the THINGS that are COVERED.

    I think you hit your stride after that.

    Have you ever taken Danielle's Technique 101 webinar? She teaches something she calls a "pivot". "However" is a good word to use that technique. 3 syllables - first one low, second one high, third one low (think "on the OTHER hand").

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments, James your the second person who has guessed I'm from Chicago, interesting and I need to work on that, I'm from the Northeast, never been to Chicago or Cleveland. Also about the slating, I've been taught that if your not asked to slate, don't.

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    Allstate Insurance

    Script:

    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Home Owners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you’ll be covered, and that’s a good feeling. However there are some things that can’t be replaced, so that’s why it’s so important to prevent the damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you’ll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Rodriguez's recording

    Outside of my usual recording space, forgive the possible sirens in the background.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality wasn't perfect as you mentioned you were outside your usual recording space. I loved your vocal performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very well done! You had more emotion in the second phrase onward, but I liked it all the same. When you say congratulations it wasn't with too much enthusiasm, but it was also sincere. I can tell you have worked on it. Quality of recording is excellent despite the background. It wasn't distracting. I like listening to your sound. It is friendly and trusting. Thank you for sharing and keep up the great work!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Tomorrow is my First Class!! Can't wait!!!! Would love some feedback on this one. Working on natural delivery and Neutral American dialect.. Thank you everyone!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Are you really glad that this person got Allstate? From the first sentence, you sounded a little "down". This is a case where if you think you've gone "over the top", it's probably just enough and you can go further. Think of how happy you would be at a relative's wedding, graduation or " Jeff Hoffman. You've just won the Superbowl! Where are you going now?" This is really a big step for that person that bought the insurance. It's a big deal! And now I'm going to tell you about all of the wonderful things that are in store for you.

    I think I understand where you were going with the sincere tone on "...and that's a good feeling." But I think that it's too somber for the congradulatory message here. You might think of it this way. "...and that's a good feeling. Isn't it? We're so glad you chose our company. And, oh, let me tell you some other things......."

    Only regionalism that I detected that gave you away was "bought". It had a really rounded "o" instead if an "ah".

    Where's your class? And good luck and have fun with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James!
    I'm doing Techniques 101 tomorrow then starting my coaching!
    I can't wait!!!
    Thanks again for your comments... These as well as others in the past...
    Keep em coming!!!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Jeff,

    You will really like working with Danielle. I've done about 5 Tech 101's with her. I also had a coaching with her a few weeks ago at Edge in NYC. It was insiteful and a lot of fun. You will really enjoy yourself. I would urge you to take as many as you can. It's basically the same material, but she switches it up a bit from webinar to webinar.

    Peer Feedback:

    Will do James!
    Thanks again!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    So? How did it go?

    Peer Feedback:

    Haha. Great James. Danielle is terrific and the class was really good! Time to go to work and try some things out!!! Ill be looking for your input!
    Best
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, James. This is Tonia from Maine. I was in the same techniques class, yesterday. I was the one coughing with the flu. Ugh. Still sick today. Day 8. This thing never ends. Anyway, loved the class, and I really enjoy your voice.

    I thought this read was really nice. I agree the second half of the first sentence could be a little more upbeat, but I thought "congratulations" felt very warm, and I'd just crank it up a titch on the second half. Notice you dropped the word "so" later on, but maybe that was an intentional decision.

    I thought you were going for serious, so not too broad a pitch range. The pace seemed medium to a touch slow, as one might have in a TV ad. "Spot on" I thought at first, but then I wondered about the demographic, for instance, would the VO be for a website after one's just pulled the trigger on buying their insurance? If that were the case, maybe read a touch faster?

    What I noticed most is that your voice sounds very warm and personal, even on a dry read, and I'm looking forward to hearing more of you in our classes together. I'm curious about what microphone you have. I haven't taken the plunge, yet, with any home studio setup, so you won't here me in the feedback forum for some time, but I have a deeper voice for a woman. What you have might work for me, too.

    Best,
    T

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia!!!!
    I felt so bad for you yesterday!!! I hope you feel better soon!!! In spite of your illness you sounded great! I'm taking The saturday tech and ringer classes on the 23rd and thinking of doing another tech 101 on the 24th! Then doing the business and others in march!!! Hope to hear you again!!!!
    Thanks for the suggestions!!!!
    I'm using an EV RE20. Lucky to be able to borrow it for now!!! Not sure if it's the right one, but because it's free... going with it for now!! I do like the overall sound though...
    Feel better and keep the comments coming!!!!! I will watch for yours as well!!!
    Best
    Jeff Hoffman

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh, I'm so jealous, Jeff. I want to dive in to the classes so badly, but I can't even read to my kids right now (Day 8 was yesterday and I still had a 101 fever!) and then next week is school vacation and we'll be away. Maybe I can swing the 23rd... I am signed up for the home studio class on the 10th, and I hope it will help me pick a mic for myself, then.

    I am feeling a bit better, today!

    I think your mic sounds great (but I know nothing technical!), and I'm excited to reach out to someone else who's entering the Edge process at the same time. It's going to be a blast! I'll be keeping my eye/ears out for you.

    Best,

    Tonia

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    Allstate Insurance

    Script:

    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Home Owners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you’ll be covered, and that’s a good feeling. However there are some things that can’t be replaced, so that’s why it’s so important to prevent the damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you’ll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any comments appreciated. This is type of work I'm seeking.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-55077.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like it. You are very engaging and your diction and pacing are very good. Gret job!

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    American Airlines

    Script:

    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Keli O's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I do not think your recording loaded properly

    Peer Feedback:

    I tried listening to this several times and could not get it to play.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounded great and had just the right pacing, clarity and inflection!

    Great job!

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    American Airlines

    Script:

    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience.

    We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers.

    We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

    56 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sherri.gray's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-124986/script-recording-96080.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there! Just a bit of background noise. And it sounds as if maybe you might be breathing in through the nose(?). Otherwise, sounds great. You have a beautiful voice. Very clear.

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    Amica Life Insurance

    Script:

    In the next fifteen minutes, you will learn the four steps towards a better retirement. An IRA will be a key player in almost any retirement plan. Here are some steps you can take now to make your IRA work harder for you and help secure a more comfortable retirement. The earlier you start contributing to a tax-deferred annuity, the larger your nest egg can grow. Over time, the combination of tax deferral and compound interest can be dramatic. Although you can open an IRA annuity with as little as 50.00, make the maximum contribution.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sean Sarah's recording

    Hey folks! Two requests for feedback. I just treated my studio so I'm hoping to hear feedback on sound in order to figure out what else needs to be done to get a clean recording. And second, I've been practicing my natural delivery so any notes on delivery would be appreciated as well. Thanks in advance!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-139419/script-recording-104674.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Sean,

    I enjoyed your take on the copy. It seemed appropriate and believable. The only thing about recording quality I have is there seems to be a little electrical hum in the background. Its not distracting but it might be something that can be edited out. Good luck.

    Jalin Gray

    Peer Feedback:

    Sean,
    I really enjoyed your read. Your interpretation was spot on and I can visualize what you are saying just by the tone and fluctuations in your voice. I would practice to remove the little sibilance I hear in your voice. But it was very good over all.

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    Apex "How to" (from Edge library, edited for flow)

    Script:

    This "how to" video teaches you how to draw a basic area using Apex.
    In future videos,
    we'll show you how to use the more advanced features of Apex
    to navigate unusual or specialized tasks.
    For now, lets stick to the basics.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear captech19's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120689/script-recording-111810.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice fits this script very well. Great pacing and clarity. Great recording quality.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds like it could have come straight from a ''how-to" narration. Well-done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Genuinely sounded like a professional recording. A bit over-enunciated on "specialized tasks." Pacing was just right.

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    Apex

    Script:

    This “how to” video is designed to teach you how to draw a basic area using Apex.
    In future videos, we will show you how to use the more advanced features of Apex that will help you get around those special or odd circumstances. For now, lets stick to the basics.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Cecily White's recording

    I've been told before that I can sound robotic and I receive that, no hard feelings! How does this read come across? Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-108238/script-recording-108040.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very clear, very neutral.
    I'd just tone down the s sounds, quite a bit of sibilance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read! I would keep the energy up through the end as 'basics' sounded to lose that tone you had throughout.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this read was spot on...The only thing that I notice is that your background sound a little echo-y.

    Other than that...I think this was perfect.

    Sincerely,

    -Kwency

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    Apex

    Script:

    This “how to” video is designed to teach you how to draw a basic area using Apex.
    In future videos, we will show you how to use the more advanced features of Apex that will help you get around those special or odd circumstances. For now, lets stick to the basics.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MBlake3's recording

    I am interested in getting more involved in the e-learning world. I would like to take the approach of offering information, but making it digestible and easy to understand.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-143508/script-recording-101904.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought your copy interpretation was professional yet conversational. Quality was excellent! Intonation was excellent! I would want to listen to more. One area I would say stood out for clarity was that your r's sounded a little throaty, if that makes any sense. They just stood out amongst the other sounds.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would encourage you to slow this down a notch or two.

    You're giving instructions (steps) to follow. Let the listener have time to absorb and process the information.

    It also mentions that this accompanies a video. So you need to see the images in your minds eye (even though you may not have the actual video to watch) to know where to take slight pauses between scenes.

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    Apple Pie Math

    Script:

    The recipe says we need six apples and three eggs to make the pie. Can you find the basket with six apples? Great! Now, we need to find three eggs. Which carton has three eggs? Oops, try again. You did it! Let's start measuring.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesskaufman7's recording

    Hi--I'm just in the basics of learning home studio work. This is unmastered audio in a temporary studio I just set up. Thoughts and suggestions welcome! This studio is for me to use and practice in for a month before I move to my new place and get set up properly. Thanks for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83796/script-recording-73945.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    That was a great read.Very up beat and encouraging .The phrase "You did it ! " was a touch too loud.Keep that same excitement but maybe back away from the mic or say it a little quieter to keep it at the same volume as the rest of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice job. I liked the cadence and the articulation - seems spot on for teaching children.
    great recording quality, too.

    well done.
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done. Great voice work for kids. Just a few level matching issues like the "You did it...let's start measuring." popped out a bit much.

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    Article for AIRS-LA

    Script:

    Hello, I'm Jody Olson. Welcome to this podcast of articles from Scouting Magazine, a presentation of AIRS-LA.
    Today's article is by Mark Ray, from the November – December 2019 issue of Scouting magazine
    Plan now for a great crossover ceremony
    A technical glitch silenced the soundtrack for Pack 183’s crossover ceremony last winter. Despite the hiccup, the Scouts had a great time and the ceremony was a success

    [read the article]
    Plan now for a great crossover ceremony
    A technical glitch silenced the soundtrack for Pack 183’s crossover ceremony last winter. Despite the hiccup, the Scouts had a great time and the ceremony was a success, according to Laura Dombroski, committee chair for the Vernon, New Jersey pack.
    “That’s when you know you’re doing something right,” she says. “It doesn’t need to be some big glitzy thing; it could just be simple.”
    That’s not to say you don’t need to plan ahead. In fact, Dombroski’s pack sets its crossover date during its annual planning meeting over the summer.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jody Olson's recording

    I have finished building my new studio. I built a Tuff Shed and insulated it with Rockwool Safe-n-Sound and put in 1/2 inch drywall. I got a 10 carat Diamond Series from Vocalboot.com at auction and used the walls for the booth. I have pictures if you need them. My sound chain is a 500 series HP Pavilion with an M-Audio MobilePre into a Neumann TLM-103.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13509/script-recording-108818.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice comes in very clear. I like it. I heard you smush a few words together as you read through. Maybe slow down a little bit to make sure to give each word its fullness.

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    Asana Explainer

    Script:

    Today, anyone can end up as the project manager. Even you. But what starts out as a simple project can quickly get complicated And when you’re working with a whole team there’s lots of room for things to fall through the cracks. But with timeline from Asana, you’ll create the perfect plan in minutes. And everyone can see how the pieces fit together.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DominicCarlos's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-135134/script-recording-109437.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent! Everything was so on the money! Absolutely no complaints!
    hope this critique helps you out
    -SL

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

    I am a stage actor making the transition. I just had my first radio ad, and through direction learned that I have a very hard time not using my "stage" voice. I recorded the Baby Massage bit a couple of days ago. I redid it, trying to speak in my normal voice. My questions are, Is this take better? Is my "stage" voice marketable as well (maybe teens, kids) or does it need to disappear altogether? Any thoughts are very welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97778/script-recording-77536.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Heatherly
    Nice. If you're a stage actor you already know how to take direction. You're 99% of the way there. Just keep practicing. Any voice work you do will always be at the whims of individual casting directors and what THEY want. Best advice - have fun! You'll win some and you'll lose some, but you already know that.
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    I can identify with you. I have been a stage actor for over 35 years and adjusting to the intimacy of doing VO is HUGE!

    A couple of suggestions that I found very helpful are:
    From Nancy Wolfson (and others):
    - Imagine that you are talking directly into someone's ear. You wouldn't use that stage voice that you would use to reach the cheap seats, you'd blow out that person's eardrums.
    - Imagine that you're having a phone conversation with a friend and you don't want the other people on the bus or train to be in on the conversation as well. Not a whisper, just more intimate.

    Even your "normal voice" may be a little too much voice in some instances.

    Yes, there are times that you're going to need that stage voice - for high energy spots, comic spots, animation and the like. But for something as intimate as this and targeted to a specific audience (imagine one person though, not an auditorium full of parents and grandparents), you have to (as one of my coaches puts it), "Gimme less voice." It could just be a matter of getting a little more intimate with the mic and softening your tone, a little more inward and chesty (resonant) rather than pointed and forward (out in front of the teeth).

    A couple of other things: You are very articulate, the voice is pleasant to listen to and you have a sense of how to break down the copy (interpretation). Don't punch the pronouns! (you & your "I know that you're talking to me!" - Nancy Wolfson again - however, there are exceptions and there are some in this copy). Your breathing is very good, no egregious (if any) mouth noises, a common problem for many. And your pacing is very good as well. I get it! However, watch "yer" for "your" or "you're" and "fer" for "for" (again, it was not egregious, but inconsistent).

    Peer Feedback:

    I do like this take better, in terms of confidence and connection to the copy, but the other was more VO sounding because it was more intimate. I'm not a stage actor, just really loud lol So this has been a pretty big thing for me too. Going back to what James was saying about Nancy's advice, use the front lower part of your throat and be sure you aren't "nicing" it up while you "devoice" to use another of Nancy's terms. She just gave me a lovely story about this yesterday :)

    The sound was a lot better in this one, but I could definitely hear some background noise from movement.

    Peer Feedback:

    +1 for what our colleagues said before.

    There were many things in this audio which pulled me in with your stream of consciousness and then there were some things that pushed me out again.

    "This video is for parents": your voice pulled me in and I was ready to hear more.
    Then... a slight exhalation right before "and grandparents". I know what what going on; however, by audio only, that almost always _sounds_ like you're bored or that you disagree with what comes immediately afterward.

    There is a little sameness in the pitch inflection of many sentences. They each sound like they have a beginning, middle, and end rather than relating with the sentences before and/or after.

    In the last sentence, I would connect the "or" with the second option rather than the first. In the audio, it comes out almost "or-a" like some Aussies say it. Connecting it with the second option mitigates that and provides a smoother delivery. Plus, it gives the listener time to digest the previous option before being invited to consider the next.

    All the best,
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow. Such great feedback!

    Bill, Thanks for that reminder and encouragement. I can be a bit of a perfectionist so the "have fun" is always helpful!

    James, Your talking-to-a-friend-on-a-train analogy really resonated with me. And, you caught me. I was absolutely picturing talking to a room full of parents.
    I did a third take that night which I think was my best vocally, as it had that resonant intimate quality you spoke of. I didn't post that one though because my delivery was awful. I had to keep concentrating to keep the resonance in my voice.
    Your comment on the punched pronouns made me laugh. Spot on. Thanks so much!

    Bean 420, Thanks especially for the comment on background noise. I've got 3 kids, so the noise factor is definitely an issue for me. I definitely need to turn my headphones way up.

    Steven, You are exactly right about the pause before grandparents. I am very animated in my face and body, and I had a feeling there would be some adjusting now that it's only my voice coming through. I confess that reading the scripts from the library is a challenge for me. I am used to plays and such and I am finding it hard to connect to these, but I am hoping that, with practice, it will come. Perhaps it will help if I use material that I have chosen from my own library. As for the predictable pitch inflection, you're right on. I am having a problem finding the proper breath support and find that I run out of breath in strange places. I thought if I used the punctuation as guides for breaths I'd be safer. I think my preplanned breathing led to preplanned inflection. Thank you for your insight!

    So excited to join this community and I look forward to learning from you all!
    Heather

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

    My first upload. I am not a techie, so would especially appreciate advice on sound quality. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97778/script-recording-77440.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Heatherly23 --
    this is a nice read. you sound like a young mother, or someone to whom a young mother would immediately relate. you have the perfect voice for a baby-tips "explainer" video.

    I thought you could improve your pace. it was unnaturally fast at times, and slow at other times. I think this read calls for a steady pace, with a comfortable, reassuring tone.

    I admit that I didn't listen with headphones and can't offer sound quality opinion....plenty of others will.

    All that said, nice job.
    cheers!
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for the critique Dave! Your advice is spot on. I am a stage actor making the transition and finding that I have a bit of detraining to do.

    Thanks so much for your help,
    Heather

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Thoughts?? This is a different approach for me - haven't tried baby stuff before. All comments appreciated - trying to grow!! Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53234.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi MHeyden!

    I particularly like your voice but it did sound reading to me....I believe, that since it's a video we are talking about here, an introduction /presentation...it could be read in a more natural way as if you were the specialist talking to parents, grandparents......anyone in charge of a baby??

    If you listen to it with your eyes off the script or simply closed.....you will get what I mean and hope this helps you!

    All the best,
    Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Eva - yes, your comments are very helpful. It's funny - as I approached this, I had in my mind a hospital volunteer talking to the mother of a newborn - and it being her first baby. I envisioned the mother with big curious eyes trying to take in all the information (and only having about 3 brain cells funtioning because she just delivered a baby 2 days ago). As such, I was trying to be sweet and very slow with this new mother. I will try again - this time I will think the baby is 2 months old!! Haha. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the warm and encouraging tone, Marianne. A little more variation in pacing and inflection, a less even delivery in other words, would give it a more conversational quality. Pretty darn good though. Your character here is a great fit for this script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Bill. I will redo this and try to incorporate these great ideas from you and Eva. Appreciate it! Marianne

    Peer Feedback:

    Marianne - To add to Bill's point. try this exercise. You know what this script is about. Put it into your own words. Just talk (record it) about about how important touch is to a newborn - from Mom, from Dad, Grandma & Grampa. Just the gist of it without looking at the script. Because you'll be forced to "visualize" for yourself what you're talking about. Use those immages when you go back to the script. And this is a good thing, yes? Enjoy it.

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    This is a redo - trying to liven it up a bit. My last try was a bit too slow and lacking in energy. There's a bit of mouth noise here - I'm pretty close up on mic.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I feel that the energy level was a little to high. I was distracted by it. You have a pleasant sounding voice and your pace was fine.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks - I will try to find a happy medium! At first I was too low, now I'm too high! Haha - will keep at it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    I would really appreciate your feedback. I think I know where I made a couple of blunders, but before I try again, I want to know if you think the same. I am working on my "ear", as well as my . . .

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    Peer Feedback:

    As a listener I'd say this almost sounds like you're talking to the parents as if THEY are the babies. For this copy in particular, I'd go for a more happy and personable read.

    You do have a good tone to your voice. Very friendly sounding and GOOD for this kind of copy. It's your pacing and delivery that don't do it for me here.

    You sound a little bit tinny too. try messing with your eq and filters.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank-you much for the helpful tips and comments : ) It's very appreciated.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    The 1st one had some weird breaks. Let me know what you think of this one, please.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Greetings Heidi...

    The recording quality was pretty good, in fact, because it allowed me to hear a lot of clicking which sounded like mouth clicks or something else tapping lightly. If you listen with headphones or the speakers turned up you'll hear what I mean.

    As for the performance, it sounded as if you were reading it to a baby.. with wide inflection and emotion...too much inflection, I think as it detracted from the message. It's ok to talk in a warm, sympathetic voice, but be careful not to talk with as much change in emotion. It's kind of when you hold a little stuffed bear in front of a baby and go "Look at the little bear mommy has... tickle, tickle, tickle.. isn't he a cute little bearsy-wearsy?" Not sure if this makes sense.

    I think your overall emotion is good and you have a good feel for this script. Well done.

    - Ron

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ron~ Thank-you so very much for the specific feedback. I really appreciate it!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Ron. I sounded as tho you were reading it to the baby as opposed to reading it to the parents and grandparents. I thought it was way too slow for elearning. The diction was good and there were good dynamics and tone, just speed it up some.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank-you! I truly appreciate the help : )

    Peer Feedback:

    Hehee. That Ron is a kick! He's right though, you might try actually reading this to someone to hear yourself casually talking to another adult, and then see the real difference in delivery. Picking up the practice of pretending to speak to another person takes a little work, but it's what the industry is looking for these days. Other than that, you did a fine job here.

    Peer Feedback:

    LOVE the tip! Thank-you so much : )

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    Bank Employee Training Web Video

    Script:

    When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page for all client interactions. Please confirm the caller's Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the "next" button, like this. Great, now let's move on to step-2.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear HCOkeefe's recording

    Still working on getting comfortable at the mic, honing the delivery, amount of emotion, range, etc. No need to comment on background noise. Thanks for all your other input and criticism!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like your a lot, the quality is really good - professional, casual, and diction very clear. The pace is best in the first sentence, perhaps a trifle slower in the next 2 sentences. Recording quality is very good, too. Hope this helps.
    DK

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, DK! After reading your comment, I 100% hear what you're talking about regarding the pacing. Cheers!

    Peer Feedback:

    You had a good interpretation of this copy. Vocal performance was good as well. Might want to be back just a tad on the mic. Nice job

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read! I agree that the pacing could pick up a bit throughout, especially after the first sentence. You could also try shorter pauses between sentences - the pauses between sentences 1-2 and 2-3 felt a bit long. I really like the friendliness that came into your voice in the last two sentences. Can you find spots to incorporate more of that tone throughout the read?

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    Bank Training

    Script:

    When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page for all client interactions. Please confirm the caller's Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the "next" button, like this. Great, now let's move on to step-2.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear damian0's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really well done! The tone of your voice was right on par with how the wording was, and you nailed every word. 10/10

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    Basketball Training

    Script:

    Nothing is more frustrating for a basketball player than to come into a season in top shape, only to find himself sitting on the bench. That's what this Fastbreak Basketball video is for. In the next hour, you'll learn how the "Flexible Fastbreak System" can transform you from a bench warmer into a player. And where else better to begin than drills. Listed for you are the five most important drills: lead-up, breakdown drills, secondary breaks drills, …….

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear damian0's recording

    Trying some e-learning, please criticize everything.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good and clear! Great pace. Intriguing delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really like you intonation or I guess you'd say also inflections you go up and down very well to make it an interesting read and certainly not monotone! My only comment would be the ending which kind of left it up in the air as though there was more to come, great work and thanks for sharing that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh sorry I guess you did it correctly because there was no ending just the. Switch means there's more to come I guess.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good... Are you shaking your head in the beginning? If not, it might help with the emotion needed to convey the level of dssappointment in your voice (without sounding forceful). Give some more light to "that's what the Fastbreak Basketball video is for".... as if to say ... here is your solution.

    If possible, add more conversational quality too.. For me, again, imagery helps a lot, yet I know that some people are less visual than I am. That said, whatever helps you connect more to the subject (maybe it's a feel of a basketball) can support your emotional connection.

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    Betrayal at House on the Hill

    Script:

    During Betrayal at House on the Hill, each player chooses an explorer to investigate a creepy old house. As you explore the house, you discover new rooms. Each time you enter a new room, you might find something... or something might find you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eay.brown's recording

    Looking for general feedback on delivery. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your tone, inflection, and pacing work together to deliver a great performance. I don't like scary stuff and this creeped me out a bit. Maybe just slow down on that opening phrase. Good audio quality too. Thanks for sharing! Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, a good delivery. I like your ominous tone in the last sentence, "or something might find you."

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording sounds nice and clean. Your inflections match the text and I liked your dramatic finish.

    Peer Feedback:

    Read was fine, but doesn't sound very "creepy"

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    Betty Crocker

    Script:

    Betty Crocker is an imaginary person. Nonetheless, in a 1945 survey she was named the second best-known woman in America, after Eleanor Roosevelt. She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion.
    Company executives decided to use the signature of “Betty Crocker” on the prize letters; Betty because the name had a warm approachable feel, and Crocker after an early company director, William G, Crocker. The fictional Ms. Crocker became so popular that she soon had her own products and recipe books, many of which still exist today.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SarahCoble's recording

    Does this sound podcast ready?

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    Peer Feedback:

    First off, to contrast with the Yellowstone recording. I can’t tell if you are from the UK and do a great US accent, or if you are from the US and do a great UK accent. I suspect the former. Either way, kudos. In this read, your voice is friendly and bubbly. Better recording quality than Yellowstone. None of the hum. Nice overall flow.
    There was some “up-talk” some lilt in pitch at the last work. “an imaginary person. Nonetheless,” and “many of which still exist today.” Save the rise in pitch for “nonetheless” and “many”. “America” has an “r” sound at the end. Did a good job with Crocker, until the last one. It had more of a “G” sound, making it closer to “Ms. Grocker”
    She was “born” in 1921 during a Gold Medal flour promotion in which users completed a puzzle to win a pin cushion. That is a tough sentence. You might want to break it up a bit more.
    Here is my “mental trick” for this one. While you are reading the script, think of the smell of baking bread.
    Overall great read on a tough piece.

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    Bicycle

    Script:

    A bicycle can be among a runner’s most valuable tools for training the body to shift into gear, develop quicker turnover, create more power and reach peak racing shape. Begin by replacing one or two of your weekly easy runs with a 60- to 90-minute bike session. After a few weeks, replace one of your weekly fast running workouts by ramping up the intensity and adding intervals in the middle of a ride. The primary goal should be to mimic the neuromuscular cadence of quick leg turnover while running.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear docr15's recording

    Continuing to work on presentation and recording quality in prep for my first professional demo.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I felt like you got the right tone as an informational conversational interpretation. The tone was solid all the way through and the pace was great. Not too fast, or too slow just right. The quality also sounded great.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Docr15,
    Great read! Very conversational and informative. The only note I can think to share (and this only stood out to me because it's something I'm working on with my coach) is to make larger differentiations in your lists, ie "shift into gear, develop quicker turnover, create more power and reach peak racing shape."
    Nice work!

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    Blue Angels

    Script:

    Blue Angels
    Strap yourself in for a high-altitude, history-making adventure -- you’re about to experience the thrill, precision, and aerial artistry of the Navy’s Blue Angels. This video opens the cockpit on this legendary squadron as they take off on their first European tour in 20 years. You’ll soar above Russia, where MIG fighters intercept and escort the BLUE ANGELS -- the first U.S. Military flight demo team ever to appear in the former enemy’s skies. You’ll discover the team’s illustrious story through archival footage and interviews with pilots and crews. And you’ll co-pilot an F-18 Hornet through its awesome stunts.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear docr15's recording

    Working on some practice scripts in prep for my first demo. Used Audacity with some noise reduction and normalized to -3.0. Sennheiser MK4 microphone, Focusrite Scarlett 2i2 3rd gen interface.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This seems to be a very Workman like read. Good delivery and enunciation . However it really had no kick to it or excitement would be my only critique. If you have a coach I'm sure they would tell you 2 speak as though you were trying to convey the excitement about the blue Angels to one person, lastly it seemed as if there was no ending punchline or highlight of f-18 hornet and what you'll get to do in this awesome stunts as a co-pilot, hope that helps and thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    I tried reading this script keeping the comments from RYoung in mind. I brought this script to life alittle more by doing these two things. I thought of something personal that really excites me, like air and car shows. then I thought about a trip i took to an aviation museum. this built excitement and visuals for me.

    I then stood up and acted this script out while standing, helped with energy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks RYoung.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks artyom123.

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    Booth Test - Caldera

    Script:

    A caldera is a cauldron-like volcanic feature usually formed by the collapse of land following a volcanic eruption. They are sometimes confused with volcanic craters. The word comes from the Spanish "caldera" and this from the Latin "caldaria", meaning "cooking pot". In some texts the English term cauldron is also used. In 1815 the German geologist Leopold von Buch visited the Las Cañadas caldera of Teide on Tenerife, and the Caldera de Taburiente on La Palma, both in the Canary Islands. When he published his memoirs, he introduced the term caldera into the geological vocabulary.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MikeChdwck71's recording

    This is ONLY a quick reading of some text in order to test a new booth set up. This is NOT being performed, it's just a sound check. I think the recording has too much ring or echo, but I would love feedback on the recording quality. This is a converted closet. I have not yet added any foam or anything, so the sound is probably bouncing around quite a bit.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Yup, definitely something going on there. It's quite eveident when listening on headphones. Kind of a hollow sound. I think it's phase cancellation from the reflections.

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah the space is too live. it definitely needs foam. if it's a closet and gluing foam might be an issue, use t-pins to hold the foam against the sheetrock. leaves small holes which can be caulked and painted.

    Peer Feedback:

    re: gluing foam

    I just did this in my closet, Mike. Instead of gluing foam to the walls, I glued them to white foamcore boards (like one would use for a science fair). I cut the boards to the size I wanted, attached string (I used a short strip of duct tape on both sides of the holes to reinforce and prevent the strings from ripping out), and then hung the panels where I wanted them with hook-style Command strips. If you cut the extra foamcore away so only foam shows, it looks pretty snazzy, too. For the ceiling, I still have a shelf with a clothes rod underneath, so I just jam one of the panels in between the shelf bottom and rod and that does the job (not as professional looking).

    On three of the panels, I attached hook-and-loop tape so that I can attach them together with a fourth propped on top for a portable vocal booth when I need it.

    It's working rather well! I bought the Auralex squares for something like $100-$125. They came with special glue in a caulking-type tube. I had two left over to stick under my monitors, so that's another problem solved. The foam boards were probably another 20 or 30. Command strips with hooks, about $15. I'm looking for a wall-to-wall remnant to put on the floor but just lay out a blanket for now.

    The setup is definitely not soundproof, but no one's complained about recording quality so I think it's absorbing quite well and the space is so small I don't have to worry about bass traps.

    I do miss the closet space.

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    Bose 3-2-1 GS System

    Script:

    Congratulations on your discerning purchase of the new Bose 3-2-1 GS System. We’ve made this award-winning 3-2-1 DVD home entertainment system even smaller and better, with an enhanced surround sound experience from just two incredibly small speakers. With Bose patented speaker technology and our latest signal processing, your new speakers will deliver the benefits of a surround sound without running wires to the back of your room…

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gj8959's recording

    I would appreciate any constructive feedback. Also suggestions as to what genre my voice may be suited for - commercial, narration, eLearning, etc. Thx!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Personally, I think you could do well in all genres. You do have an excellent voice for narration and eLearning. To do commercials I would just say be more natural, yourself. Recording quality is great.

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    Bowflex

    Script:

    Bowflex
    Welcome to BowFlex, the recognized leading manufacturer of exercise equipment since 1989. Everyday, millions of people use our equipment to enrich their health and lifestyle…and we’re glad you’re one of them.
    Now, to help you lose weight,
    shape and tone your body,
    improve your cardiovascular health,
    increase your metabolism,
    and to help you look and feel your best, we're pleased to introduce you to the ‘BowFlex Criss-Cross Personal Gym’ DVD.
    This interactive DVD makes everything from assembly, maintenance, and usage a snap! It allows you to tailor your workouts to match your goals. It walks you through the assembly process step-by-step! It even contains software that you can download onto your own computer to keep detailed logs of your workouts!
    Ready? Great. Choose a chapter and join millions of other happy and fit people.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear fauldssa's recording

    Looking for feedback on the narration, not the quality of the recording so much. Thanks!!

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    Peer Feedback:

    The recording was clear, however there was some background noise (not sure what it was) and be careful to annunciate clearly, like "millions". You have a gentle quality to your voice, I really like it. Just keep going!!

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    Bowflex

    Script:

    Welcome to BowFlex, the recognized leading manufacturer of exercise equipment since 1989. Everyday, millions of people use our equipment to enrich their health and lifestyle…and we’re glad you’re one of them.

    Now, to help you lose weight, shape and tone your body, improve your cardiovascular health, increase your metabolism, and to help you look and feel your best, we're pleased to introduce you to the ‘BowFlex Criss-Cross Personal Gym’ DVD.

    This interactive DVD makes everything from assembly, maintenance, and usage a snap! It allows you to tailor your workouts to match your goals. It walks you through the assembly process step-by-step! It even contains software that you can download onto your own computer to keep detailed logs of your workouts!

    Ready? Great. Choose a chapter and join millions of other happy and fit people.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tonia's recording

    Two takes. Sorry if you have to adjust the volume on your monitors between takes--I could figure out how to normalize them after I'd done my other editing and gave up. :) Take 1: I tried to be smiley and upbeat. Take 2: I dropped into a lower register. What do you think when you compare the reads? I'm trying to work out my different voice personalities--ex. conversational tone vs. professional. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonya. You managed to sound very easy and relaxed while keeping up the energy at the same time. I think the second recording was closer to the mic and so it sounded closer to me as I listened than the first one did. The only problem I really detected was that the ending was a little abrupt in the second recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia
    Great job! Love your voice, diction, acting choices. I think I preferred the first one - more conversational.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Ladies. We're staying with in-laws this week, and I brought a travel version of my equipment. It's been a bit of an eye-opener, actually. I'm using a desk mic stand and a desk that's too low (scrunches my neck), plus I'm sitting down, plus I'm feeling a little self-conscious, and I think that drained some of the energy from my read (I thought the first sounded low energy). It does make being natural a little easier, though, almost like standing up for the read gets me feeling too much in a performer frame of mind. I thought the first sounded more conversational and the second more my "professional" voice, although I was trying to sound conversational in both. Interesting how dropping into a lower register did that automatically.

    Weird how the ending gets cut off. That's an artifact of the Edge site (If you play it starting with only the last little bit, it doesn't get cut off.) I've noticed that reads uploaded without enough of a buffer at the start get cut off some, and now I know it does that on the other end, too!

    Thanks, again!

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    Bowling Tips

    Script:

    Throwing the perfect shot can lead to a higher bowling score; throwing lots of perfect shots can lead to a perfect game — a score of 300. To achieve a perfect hook shot:

    1. Straighten the wrist of your bowling hand. Your bowling hand, not surprisingly, is the one that’s holding the ball. Be careful not to bend or flex your wrist.

    2. Hold your hand straight while you swing the ball out and back.

    3. Begin to rotate the wrist, hand, and fingers on your bowling arm toward the opposite side of your body as the ball comes forward.

    4. Let go of the ball near your ankle and finish with your hand in the handshake position after you release the ball. You know your hand is in the handshake position when your thumb is pointing up and your palm is facing the inside of the lane.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear zoo.keepers's recording

    I'd appreciate your comments on this practice recording in preparation of a demo. All comments are welcome; the good, the bad, and the ugly. Now, let's go bowling!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation - good, I you sound like a bowling instructor and this appears to be educational script

    Vocal Performance - my suggestions - make it as smooth as you can. One trick is to pretend that you are talking to someone, rather than reading a script. Nit picky here 'throwing lots' could be practiced so that it is smoother. Also, I think that you overemphasize the word 'bend' or 'flex'. If you are not using a pop screen I suggest you get one.

    Recording quality - personally I would remove all breaths so that the read is absolutely clean, for me it is distracting to hear inhalations before each sentence.

    Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Alot of breaths and mouth noises.

    After you read each numbered list item, I like the way you pause for a moment so as to allow the listener to absorb what you said for just a moment before moving onto the next item on the list.

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    Business Builders

    Script:

    Welcome to Episode 8 - Executing Your Idea. So have you ever wondered how some people just get it all done? Well in this episode, we'll talk about the 4 steps that make it happen. When you're ready to begin, click episode 8 on your screen - ready?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Pyahdonequah's recording

    I have a lot of mouth clicks and I want them gone, how can I edit them out? Also, I have never done voiceover work before and am doing my first class in April - please be gentle!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have a comment on the recording quality since I'm on my laptop and it has not the best speakers, lol. As far as performance, you sound a bit nervous (well, you did mention you haven't done VO before).

    Perhaps imagine you're, say, out to dinner with a pretty lady whom you sense thinks you are really handsome and witty. Maybe that will relax you for the read. I know it's an odd suggestion, but hey, whatever works, this is acting after all....

    Peer Feedback:

    Welcome. A good place to start is with emphasis/inflection. Some call it "hitting" or "punching" the words. As you preview the script, consider which words are key. Good writers use modifiers sparingly. Verbs are often key as well. Titles and brands are obviously important. Place a slight emphasis on these kinds of words. So, the title "Executing Your Idea" is important and, since it is the 8th episode, you might imagine that earlier episodes dealt with "Articulating Your Idea" or "Researching Your Idea", etc. If so, then executing is the unique word in the Episode 8 title and needs some emphasis. (So does the episode number -- 8) Do this by lifting the pitch slightly as you say "Executing" NOT by saying it louder. Another key word is the modifier "four". How many steps are there? Four steps, not three or five, so emphasize that word too. Etc. etc. This is just one of the fundamentals.

    In short, my suggestion is to mark your scripts and emphasize the key words a bit more than you did here. Good luck with your class and keep posting.

    Peer Feedback:

    Editing out mouth clicks is not an easy thing to do, especially if it is in the middle of a word or phrase. If they are in the clear, before and after, then it might be easier. It also depends on what software you're using.

    One thing that causes excessive mouth noise is completely closing your mouth before or after you take a breath. You get a little lip smacking. You may not notice it in normal conversation, but the mic betrays you. Try making a conscious effort to keep your mouth open when you finish a sentence and breathe to begin the next.

    Conventional wisdom is to keep hydrated. In my case, I feel it to be the exact opposite. I have excess salilva that causes the bottom of my tougue to click against my lower gum line. I just try to say the problematic word(s) over and over again in attempt to get my tongue to stop making that noise. It's like training any other muscle in your body. As far as the hydration issue goes. I have been told by some pros and read the same in a couple of books - that it takes 1 -1 1/2 hours for a drink of water to process through your body. So thinking that you can just alleviate the problem by immediately taking a drink is misleading. One (constantly) working voice talent I know makes sure that she drinks a 12 oz bottle of water at least an hour before she even goes to her audition at a recording studio.

    Are you using a pop screen? Some of those nioses can come from plosives (p's & b's, etc.).

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    Business Management Software Video

    Script:

    Your online business is growing. That’s a good thing. But as orders increase, so do the bottlenecks in business processes. To keep growing, you need to do a better job at managing inventory, processing & fulfilling orders and keeping your customers happy – all while expanding into new channels.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear artyom123's recording

    headset mic, not looking for audio quality. Seeking advice on how well I connected to script and what message I gave, what I can do better. Thank you !

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice deep and warm voice. I think one thing that would help is if you utilized a "de-esser" in your DAW. your S's are cutting through. If you don't have a pop filter this can also help with your "plosives". Also speaking into the mic at an angle and not straight on can help with this. Keep it up!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jenniferj_Burns's recording

    Look for overall comments and if you hear an echo please. This was not recorded in a home studio

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi... I liked your voice. It was pleasant to listen to. Technical comment; in a few places the space between sentences seemed to be a bit too crowded together and sounded a little rushed. Personally, I also think the "feel" of the recording could have benefited with a tad more modulation in the tone / emotion of your voice. Looking forward to more!

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    C++ Developing an Application

    Script:

    From the Edge Studio Practice Script library:
    Developing an Application
    The application you'll create (called Myapp) is a subset of the VIEWEX sample application provided with the MFC samples. Myapp lets you open new child windows, each displaying an initial message, in a Multiple Document Interface (MDI) application. When you choose Change Text from the Text menu in Myapp, a dialog box opens and allows you to change the text of the message in the currently active child window.

    Myapp starts as a default application created by AppWizard. You'll add eight lines of code to this starter application to print a message when each new document window (MDI child window) is opened. Then, you'll create a dialog box for editing the message and add a menu command for opening the dialog box.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mr.GordonAndersen's recording

    I took the Investigate Voice Over class last month. I've since purchased a new mic and audio to digital converter box. This is my first recording. I value your feedback on both my performance, and my studio skills. This is a "raw" recording, no filters, no EQ, no splicing etc. Thank you for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120474/script-recording-93776.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    To me this sounded like what I would expect from a computer application webinar. I liked the phrasing and tonal accents. However, from what I am learning, clients today want it more personal so maybe trying a more "explaining it to a friend" approach would work better?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments. I'll record another take in order to incorporate your feedback. I'll focus more on the explain it to a friend, and engaged/bright sounds. I'll post it in the next few days. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment on my first recording!

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    Chase Mobile App | Schedule A Payment in Bill Pay

    Script:

    To schedule a payment log into your Chase Mobile App and tap the menu. Now tap pay bills and then tap schedule payment. Select the payee you wish to schedule a payment with and enter your payment details. Submit the payment to view the confirmation screen. That’s it. You’ve paid the bill.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kenneths's recording

    Working on some of the final scripts for my narration demo. This one is for an e-learning/explainer meant to be read over imagery related to the copy. It is a little faster read than it would be normally for the demo… love any thoughts on interpretation and performance. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-151887/script-recording-106628.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, you sound born to do this type of read. Pleasant, natural, and clearly delivered. I liked the pace and voice placement. Your recording quality is right on! This recording could be the actual demo. It's that good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Miko again. Man, you are going to have an amazing demo and, I think, win auditions soon if you haven't already been. You are in command of all the aspects of the performance and are able to deliver pristine audio too. I would prefer a bit less raspy/intimate and a bit more supported, fuller voice for this type of read. A little more proper and business-like. Just my opinion, but it's quite similar to your museum tour style and I'd like to hear more distinct examples on a demo. Love it though. Bill A.

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    Cheese

    Script:

    Oregon's Willamette Valley is one of the largest cheese growing regions in the country. Its mild climate, abundance of water and fertile soil provide ideal conditions for growing the cheetoh bushes which give us cheese.

    During the harvest season, migrant workers (mostly from Canada) pick the cheetos. Some of these are packaged and consumed raw, but the vast majority are transported to Tillamook, where they are refined into various kinds of cheese and shipped around the world from one of the west coast's major shipping ports in Tillamook Bay.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    OK, a recording with mic #5. Two takes & call it good. Oh, and I caught the "nDuring..." but I'm too lazy to do it over :-) So is this too silly (errr, cheesy) to consider including on a demo?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/cheese.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sundance,
    Demo material? No. I'm expecting Masterpiece Theater not Tillamook cheese. You certainly could use it with another bed. It's just too regal for such a laid back delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    "Regal ceremonious theme with classical feel" - I needed something about :45 seconds in length, and this is what I had. But the whole production is sort of supposed to be one big non sequitur...

    But the question was semi-serious: is there room on a narration demo for a humorous piece or does it have to be all Masterpiece Theater/Discovery Channel?

    Peer Feedback:

    Absolutely, humor is displaying range and I think is a big plus.. A piece though that tries to bridge both is risky at best. Your audience are going to be quick studies. If your delivery doesn't deliver the goods in an obvious way your dead in the water and on your way to the circular files.

    Peer Feedback:

    45 seconds may be a bit too long for one spot, even for a narration demo. Humor and the tongue-in-cheekness is probably fine, but then you really have to go for it. The dry delivery with the regal sounding music sounds a bit incongruous here. That's not to say that it is in all situations. If you're married to the music, broaden the vocal quality and make it similarly regal. Then the "funny" is taken care of with the text. Conversely, if you're married to the laid back read, select a bed that supports the humor of the copy - which could be cut down, re-written and/or re-worked to tighten up the joke.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hang on guys! I think there has been a bit of a misunderstanding here...

    First, I will not be producing my own demo, so this in no way represents an attempt at a finished, demo-ready production clip. This one is posted for fun. The dissonance is intentional, but not indicative of how it would be produced if it were to be included in a demo. The question was merely whether the _script_ was suitable (with appropriate direction and production provided by a professional). And reading my notes from when I posted the clip, I can see that I didn't make that clear.

    I am in the process of trying to come up with potential scripts for a demo, and there is a certain sameness about the ones I've got so far, so I'm trying to find something to kind of break it up a bit. And yes, I'm aware that the full 45 seconds would not get included...

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed the performance in instantly got the humorous use of classical style music. There's a hilarious clip out there called the "F-Word" that uses classical music and the VO sounds like Larry King. Worth a listen if the word doesn't melt the cartilage in your ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    OK, I found that on YouTube. Reminds me of a linguistics professor I had in college - Wayne O'Neil. He gave pretty much that same lecture once, so I wonder if the creator of the clip had him as a professor as well. Seems he was frequently used as an expert witness in obscenity cases where the F word had been used. At the time (and this was quite a few years ago), he said he had never lost a case. But in his testimony, he would basically explain what is explained in the video...

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    Children's Educational Space Game

    Script:

    Today we’re going to explore all of the planets in our solar system and some other places as well. We’ll travel into the future when astronauts live throughout the solar system. On each world we’ll see what the weather is like, what we would wear, and what we would do to have fun! Grab your oxygen, put on your seatbelt, and let’s blast off!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesshayes's recording

    This is my first time uploading a recording so I'm excited to hear your feedback. I noticed a couple of spots where my mic seemed to pop and I'm not sure why. I'm still troubleshooting. Looking forward to your comments!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126798/script-recording-108621.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jesshayes...first I loved the little giggle on "and what we would do to have fun!" This made me giddy and really set the mood.

    My main critique is to go slower...as the recording progressed you did slow things down but the first sentence we jumped RIGHT IN. Here is a small suggestion, try.. "Today (1 second pause) we're going to explore all of the.." and then lift on solar system. This would set the right tone from the start.

    I do love your voice, and it is perfect for this genre. The post-production editing sounded fine. Keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    That's helpful, thanks for the suggestion lesjr27!

    Peer Feedback:

    My pleasure Jesshayes!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rcooper1944's recording

    Pauses are for on line graphics of people and places.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation: slower and more drama. it sounds conversational. If that's what you're aiming for, cool.

    Vocal Performance: OK, some criticism ... words that end in "est" -- largest, earliest -- pronounce the "t". Be careful of "mouth noises" like those pesky clicks and little sounds we're not aware of until a mic picks it up. Eating slices of apple prior to recording can, interestingly enough, help with that.

    Recording quality: I understand that you created pauses for graphics, but make the pauses silent. No room or chair noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Heard a little noise during the pauses towards the end of the read. But overall a nice read.

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    Color Channel Explainer

    Script:

    A photo is made of three channels: red, green, and blue that when combined
    form a color photo. For this orange and teal look, we're going to start by converting from
    three channels to two channels.

    To do this, go to the adjustments panel and add a channel mixer adjustment layer.
    If you don't see this panel, you can open it by going to "window", and then "adjustments".

    Here in the channel mixer properties, go to the blue channel and set the green to 100%,
    and the blue to zero.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Myles Catania's recording

    Practice recording of an explainer / how-to script. I'm not on the lookout for anything specific this time; any feedback is appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-145135/script-recording-104875.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Myles,
    My only suggestion would be to narrow the range of inflection and watch the pauses; smooth it out a bit. You hit some words a bit too hard, to my ears, which some might take as sounding impatient. Now, another listener might like this because you are direct and clear, so I hope someone else chimes in on this point. I just think you can emphasize with a bit less punch. I've learned that gesturing with your hands as you draw attention to something you're describing adds the subtle vocal emphasis needed. Are you compressing the audio? Just curious. Great clarity. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    great explainer read. Your delivery is very easy to listen to, and I suspect would be easy listening for a long-form explainer as well. Great clarity and pace for listeners to follow instructions.
    Note: there were a couple places where you swallowed the last syllable of "channel", making it sound more like "chan" or "chan'l".

    Recording quality was very good.

    All in all, it's a very competitive read. I would not be surprised if you booked this job.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't compress this, Bill, but that's a good idea! I'll play around with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Myles,
    No need to compress it. It sounds very good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very well done! The upbeat tone is very good for an e-learning project. My only feedback would be to adjust your EQ settings to brighten up the audio a bit. Sounds just a bit muddy in my headphones.

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    Color explainer

    Script:

    A photo is made of three channels: red, green, and blue, that when combined form a color photo. For this orange and teal look, we're going to start by converting from three channels to two channels. To do this, go to the adjustments panel and add a channel mixer adjustment layer. If you don't see this panel, you can open it by going to "window", and then "adjustments". Here in the channel mixer properties, go to the blue channel and set the green to 100% and the blue to zero.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear damian0's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-101041/script-recording-111700.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello damian0

    Generally excellent audio quality although I heard a fair amount of environment noise (clothes, mouth, mic stand knock etc.) but most of that could be resolved with tighter editing.

    I really like the quality of your voice: the tone, the pace of the read and the emotion. But I find your inflections of some words a little distracting. The words "channels, photo, look, channels, panel, adjustments and zero" all inflect down too much and it sounds unnatural and "ready", by the end of the read I'm anticipating these inflection drops and they come as expected which is very distracting from the read.

    I would like to hear you vary the delivery a little more, try something a bit more radical when you practice, to get out of your comfort zone try a crazy accent or something. It might help loosen you up for the final recording?

    Good luck

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    Cooking for Kids

    Script:

    Cooking is a great thing to start teaching kids at an early age. I grew up in family full of great cooks and chefs. Watching them prepare wonderful meals or just a good sandwich was always fun to me and developed my love for cooking.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear boxermom2000's recording

    Hi Gang, trying out a new DAW...also, having a little trouble with sibilance lately. Any suggestions? ~Laura

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! And congrats on your win for the contest! :)

    For the sibilance, keep the tongue sharp and get on those tongue twisters! Do you do any for warm ups?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Laura:

    I don't think sibilance was too strong on this recording, so you must be working on it. I like the read very much, feels real, honest, and comfortable. Maybe a longer pause after "chefs" would be a good idea to separate the two sentences more clearly. It sounds like they run together, a bit confusing.

    The room sounds nice, not too dead, a little lively. Mic technique is spot on and the noise is low. Maybe the recording levels are a little bit low?

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    Creating Pivot Tables

    Script:

    The data that’s going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list, and must not have empty rows in it, nor empty columns. If you have any interim subtotals in there, get rid of them. Get rid of those empty rows. Click on any cell within here; Now on the Insert tab, go to the leftmost button -- many times you’ll simply click that button, then click okay.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback! Thanks so much!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked this read, Steph! You have clear emphasis and diction, you keep a nice pace to this technical copy, and there's a bit of a smile and tease I can hear in some of your instruction. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read - maybe a tad bit rushed for an instructional video. Your audience is going to be concentrating on following your instructions, so don't stress them out by dashing through the steps.

    It would be fun to pretend that there are visuals that accompany the steps, including some off-camera mouse clicking FX - which would really pace this read out in bite size pieces.

    Kind of like "The data that's going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list --
    , , - and must not have...." etc.

    just my 2c,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you are reading this a bit too fast like Dave said. Slow down the pace a bit and I think it will sound more natural. Not to say it didn't sound natural at all.

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    Crisis Management

    Script:

    Thanks for coming to “The Management of Aggressive Behavior” Training module. This module contains 3 sections:
    The First section is Prevention which will give you the skills to verbally de-escalate a client before a crisis
    The Second section is Crisis management, this section will teach you the outward signs of each crisis stage and how to correctly process with someone in each crisis stage.
    The final section is Physical intervention. This section will go over a therapeutic hold and the proper way to physically handle an individual in crisis.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear damian0's recording

    Some more e-learnings, comments on all aspects welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-101041/script-recording-111559.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great work! Diction is clear and phrasing is mostly fine, though the intonation of the module title and the pause after "Behavior" felt slightly off.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear danfishersvoice's recording

    I have auditioned with Voices.com 345 times over the last year and have earned one job. I talked to Lin and she told me I should be standing not sitting. She also recommended I have this check-up with you guys. I am clearly doing some things wrong...I know this is a competitive business...I just need a little help I think. I am using a CAD M179 microphone. Thanks, Dan Fisher

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-23251/script-recording-45893.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your tone is more suited for a documentary read. Maybe a more friendly intro, an excitement to share some information. The delivery didn't sound authentic to the copy. Also, be careful with pronunciation; Fibonacci was mispronounced the first time, and the 2nd time was hesitant.

    Peer Feedback:

    To my ears this didn't sound as conversational as the copy would suggest. I'm also hearing southern accent here and there (intended?)...

    Audio sounded fine to me. Not the greatest mic in the world, but you seem to do well with it.

    You do sound in this submission as though you could relax just a bit and improve the delivery. If the southern delivery isn't intended, it's definitely present and might need some ironing out. Most everyone on the forum is helpful as far as their ears and experience allows...hope this helped.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wonder... do you use your hands when speaking? If I had to guess, you didn't during this recording. I've found using your hands really gives you emphasis and dynamics you never knew you had. I never naturally use my hands when speaking in public so I had to teach myself how.

    Of course, if you already do, then maybe the posture of standing for the first time threw off your energy and kicked you out of 'the zone' a bit.

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    Demo Script

    Script:

    1.How crazy is this—over a hundred inches of snow here in Buffalo, NY. Winter is a wonderland where snowmobiles have replaced automobiles, and snow drifts cover front doors!

    2.Why in the richest democracy in the world are there over 9 million adults with serious mental illnesses while less than 2% can find a hospital with a psychiatric bed. America, WHY?

    3.Right this way folks to Miss Piggy’s Pork Farm and an unprecedented tour of the world’s best lip smackin’ ham, pork rinds, and “pig tales.”

    4.So, who uses words like musicians use notes? Voice Actors. They tell stories that record human life and teach generations how to live, and how to Love.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eagleye's recording

    Hello Randye: Last attempt, I promise until we have our first Skype next Tuesday, 7PM. This time when I read your feedback, and listened again to my read, I heard what you are said! OK, maybe this is a little thing, but a BIG one for me. I think this means my brain is starting to get it! Hopefully this attempt is an improvement!! Thanks for your help!! PS Hope your holidays are going well...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-88386/script-recording-77017.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    From your comment, I'm guessing that this was really only intended for Randye. There's a box to check when seeking Edge coach feedback/checkups that only sends your submission to them and not to the general Forum.

    However.

    Some questions: Are these scripts for a proposed demo? If so, what kind? It seems to be a mix of genres. The first one looks like a news cast or weather forecast, the second political, the third either a tour or commercial and last one E-learning or informational.

    By and large, they all sound like you are simply reading. There's little connection to the material or POV. I hear a lot of Edge Handbook "technique" (inflection, pitch modulation, emphasizing certain words, etc.). I understand the words that you are speaking and that they kind of form complete sentences, but feel little relation to what you're saying to me.

    Even though #1 & #2 are very different scripts, they sound pretty much the same - in dynamic range (pitch), vocal quality, inflection, pace, intensity, volume and energy.

    #3 - Not sure that Jim Henson's outfit would appreciate the implication that their beloved Miss Piggy is likened to tasty treats. Obviously a fictitious Pork Farm commercial or tour narration. A simple Google search lead me to a Miss Piggy Farm in Ashland, Virginia, but little information about it. If it was meant for comic effect, it missed the mark. (But it might not if you went really broad with it.) I love pork in nearly all it's various forms, but I do not see the appeal of voicing a tour/commercial of a pig butchering pork farm. Especially after the image of that famous muppet flashes through my mind.

    #4 - Kind of sounds like a children's story delivery. The L's on "live" and "love" were a little wonky. Sounded a little tongue-tied - kind of slapping in the bottom of your mouth.

    The last line of the copy says it all. However, these reads are far from being "storytelling" or "conversational", nor are they teaching me anything because I cannot relate to what is being said as human to human communication. They're just somewhat connected words mechanically read from a page.

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    Diabetes education

    Script:

    One way your body keeps sugar in target ranges is with a hormone called insulin. Think of insulin as a special key. This key unlocks doors in different cells so that the cells can use or store sugar. As Type 2 diabetes progresses, your body does not produce enough insulin to balance sugar levels. In other words, there are not enough keys to open doors that allow your body to use or store sugar. Also, your body does not use insulin as well as it used to. This means that some doors don’t recognize the keys, which keeps sugar in the body longer. And . . . Lastly, your body maintains too much sugar when it doesn’t need it.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear LisaFeltes's recording

    This was an audition I did recently on a p2p. Would like some feedback on style, pacing and intonation please. Also, still working on the editing process. Advice welcome! Thanks in advance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114258/script-recording-94393.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your mastering volume is very low. Do you know what your peak dB is? It should be between -6dB and -3dB.

    Generally, the pace may be just a bit brisk. With such heady subject matter, your listener needs time to hear, understand and absorb the information coming at them, especially if they know little to nothing about it, which is always a good assumption. However, the general quality of the read if good.

    A couple of noise things. A big click after "insulin" at the end of the first sentence - probably something that could be cleanly snipped out. Same thing after "sugar" at the end of the third sentence.

    The breath sound could have been snipped out after "progresses". Same with the next couple breaths. It kind of sounds like you used a de-breather or noise gate, because the breath sounds don't sound "natural" - more like "catch breaths", a slight pause, then into the next part.

    There seem to be the same kind of sounds - clicks or cut off catch breath - at nearly every comma and period throughout the rest of the recording.

    Most, but not all, S sounds are a little sharp, just a touch sibilant. Not uncommon in the female voice. Discovering where in your vocal frequency range those S's occur and attenuating the EQ just a touch will probably do the trick. A de-esser basically does the same thing.

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    Disciplining Children -- How to Video

    Script:

    If you’re going to get back in charge at your house as soon as this tape is over, exactly how are you going to do it? We’ll take you through it step by step… It works and it’s easier than you think. Now … let’s look a few examples of how to use these behavior tactics with three problems that often drive parents nuts: Cleaning rooms … eating … and going to bed.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tonia's recording

    Just a quick one without edits. Trying to keep momentum forward... Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice and manner were very relaxed in this read. The tempo was slow, which, in my opinion is appropriate for this read. You came across as a caring, nonjudgmental helper for parents with problems. Your enunciation was also clear without being overdone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, I thought it was a clear and concise reading. The tone came across as natural to me. The only thing that might be considered was the first few words of the first sentence. It seemed a little choppy to me and the words "back" and "charge" were hit very hard. The first few words didn't flow with the remainder of the read to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the comments and help, Chris and CLCoop. Appreciate it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think my favorite part of this read is the lighter, reassuring tone of "We'll take you through it..." after the first sentence. Very clear, very natural, and very well recorded.

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    Disease Management

    Script:

    Welcome to the module
    Concepts of Disease Management
    Disease management shifts the focus of healthcare from managing individual interventions and their costs, to managing a disease as a whole.
    This module examines four concepts crucial to most disease management systems: a focus on the disease rather than individual episodes, integration of healthcare settings, value-based reimbursement, and continuous clinical evaluation and feedback.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Waltonia's recording

    An audition from last month. There was no direction on the posting except that it's for an E-Learning module on disease management.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111483/script-recording-91825.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! Nice pacing at the beginning. Seemed to speed up just a tad in the second half, but the spacing between list items is still adequate. Hope you get the gig!

    Peer Feedback:

    Not all that much up on E-Learning and/or the requirements for the audition process. But, just guessing, the client would probably want to hear something close to a finished, produced product - which means editing out breaths, among other things. I heard at least 3 breaths. There seemed to be one edited out after "systems" - which was a pretty hard edit, sounding more like a noise gate because the end of the word was clipped off ever-so-slightly.

    Generally, IMHO, it needs to slow down just a touch, especially if it is going to be linked up with video or a PowerPoint presentation. The listener needs time to digest the concepts.

    The vocal is pleasant and easy to listen to. This kind of stuff is pretty "dry" by nature, so you might think about personalizing it a little - talking one-on-one to a specific listener rather than thinking of teaching the masses. You want to reach one individual at a time, even though it's designed for a broader audience.

    Recording quality seems pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent feedback, guys. Thanks. I did not get this job, but I have a credit here for feedback, so I thought I'd use the audition file. Yeah, I think slowing down is a good idea for the E-Learning thing. As you say, James, the old "one-on-one imagined specific listener" method does always make my reads somehow more natural. It's hard for me, but it works. Gotta keep working on that.
    I left a few breaths in, but attenuated them (got that method from you, James) because I thought e-learning might be okay with some of that. Still, you weren't supposed to noticed the edited segments--I'll have to work on that.
    Thanks again Tom and James.
    And 12 + 4 = it doesn't take much to be a human these days, but good to see Edge is on it!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're interested in E-Learning, you should research the trends. Listen to examples. For instance, breath sounds are perfectly fine and natural for audiobooks (even encouraged for realism), but even for long form narration like documentaries and even web based material, you'll (almost) never hear a breath sound. But the spacing and pacing are such that you really don't notice that they're missing. On the other hand, when listening to hours and hours of an audiobook with headphones or earbuds, if the listener's brain doesn't hear or detect the hint of a breath or an actual breath sound, psychologically, the listener's mind gasps for breath and becomes anxious without consciously knowing why. Because it's a "naked" experience - no visuals, no music, no sound FX. The listener expects that someone talking to them that intimately is going to breathe because that's what happens in real life.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good point. I'll have to bone up on my genres of VO more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Randye! Good feedback to move forward with.

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    Dish Net DVR

    Script:

    Congratulations! Welcome to the exciting world of Dish Network DVR. We have designed this ‘quick tips video’ to help you get the most out of your Dish Player DVR. And at the end of this video, you’ll be able to: pause live TV for up to 2 hours, skip commercials in recorded or paused programming, create your own instant replays by skipping back, fast forward to get to the good parts of your shows, reverse record live TV to watch scenes again, and record your favorite TV shows and movies.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JasonArnold's recording

    Trying to add more 'life' to my recordings. Thanks for the feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    A very articulate read. I would work on sounding more natural (conversational), like you're telling a buddy about the cool things he can do with his new DVR.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good to me Jason. Nicely paced and good navigation through the "list" using specific choices. If I were to be nit-picky, I would say in the line "...to help you get the most..." the phrasing break between the words "you" and "get" sounds a little odd to my ear. Other than that I thought it was a good pass.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bringing "life" doesn't necessarily mean to "force" points on the listener. The entire delivery sounds a little "put on" and exaggerated, like you're making an effort to goose it up rather than letting it happen organically.

    So. Who are you talking to? Not a "general" who but a "specific" who.

    For instance, on one of my recent trips to Costco, a very nice young woman engaged me in a "conversation" about switching from my cable company to DirecTV. She didn't single me out like a carnival barker, but simply made eye contact and "engaged" me. And she didn't try to "sell" me. She merely laid out the compare/contrast for me. It was a "pitch" she had obviously been trained to give, but it was delivered in a friendly and disarming way.
    I signed up, got home and my wife put the kibosh on the whole thing. We're still with the cable company.

    That's what's missing here. I don't feel like you're talking so much "to" me as "at" me.

    The overall volume is rather low and there is some room echo.

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    Dish Net DVR

    Script:

    Congratulations! Welcome to the exciting world of Dish Network DVR. We have designed this ‘quick tips video’ to help you get the most out of your Dish Player DVR. And at the end of this video, you’ll be able to: pause live TV for up to 2 hours, skip commercials in recorded or paused programming, create your own instant replays by skipping back, fast forward to get to the good parts of your shows, reverse record live TV to watch scenes again, and record your favorite TV shows and movies.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear my edits? How is my performance?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds genuine.

    You have a different audio level on one of your above recordings.
    Is that on purpose?

    What recording software program are you using?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you slaucoin. I recorded the scripts and the next day I could not remember if I normalized the tracks. One of the three takes I normalized and I think I had already normalized so I had a big concern. I bounced them to disk and took my chances. I am using ProTools.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    I am gathering a variety of narrative scripts for audio books, eLearning, etc...that I plan to use with future coaching through Edge. I think this would work for eLearning. Plus, while I await for my Audacity course to begin, I am playing around with some minor editing techniques. I am also still trying to find my sweet spot with my mic. Of the previous pieces I have posted, I hope this one demonstrates a sense of growth in my vocal performance and quality of recording.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, yes, yes. Definitely headed in the right direction. The vocal quality and level (volume) of the delivery was quite good as well - more intimate and not trying to reach for the upper mezzanine. Sound quality is really good. Once you cover and get a grasp of FX processing with Larry (NR, EQ, compression, etc.) You'll be good to go.

    The pacing was really quite good. And you captured the tone and character of the piece intended by the author quite effectively. It held interest and coaxed the listener to want to hear more. Very instructive and interesting - as if these revelations were being presented for the first time. I felt that I (as a single listener) was being "talked to" by a friend instead of being "talked at" by a disembodied voice.

    With the exception of the tag - "To expand your vision..." to the end seemed disjointed from the overall tone, rhythm, messaging and sound quality from the rest of the piece. I can only guess, but it seemed that it was recorded a bit separated in time from the rest - like you took a break and came back to it or something. One way to help keep that from happening is to play back the last few sentences and talk along with them to get back into the rhythm and general feel of what came before. (ADDENDUM) On the other hand, after listening a few more times, it seems to be more of an instruction than a continuation of the narrative. In which case, set it off with a little space (see below).

    One thing I learned from one of the engineers who occasionally works at Audible Studios is about timing the silences (room tone). 1/2 - 1 second before the recording begins. (Yours here was nearly 7 seconds.) 3.5 - 4 seconds from the title/author/slate to "Forward" or "Chapter One/Chapter Title". 2 - 2.5 seconds from "Chapter One/Chapter Title" into the body of the text. 3.5 seconds at the end of a chapter (which means with the other 1/2 - 1 second at the beginning, there is actually 4 - 4.5 seconds between chapters). And 1.5 - 2 seconds in between sections within a chapter (white space on the page). Those are general guidelines that Audible engineers go by.

    Now for the downside: Right from the top - "I go outside..." Those three words got a little smushed together. Here's one thing that I learned from Barbara Rosenblat. Ease into the beginning of a book (or chapter) with just a touch slower pace than when you get rolling with the story or narrative. The same for the end. Slow a bit to give it that "period" or "button" of finality before continuing on to the next chapter. Same idea at the end of the book - wrap the story up, even it lends itself toward a continuation or sequel.

    Overall, some very good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    So glad you were able to hear some improvements! That last section was recorded separately and I was way to energized! Instead of recording it over again I wanted to play around with the envelope tool and compress the pitch down. But it was sloppy. Larry's class can't start soon enough for me! I've been reading Barbara's book and I made note on finding my sweet spot on the mic, and having a "button" at end of a moment (that is an acting term too!!), which I applied to tgectrabsitions within the selection as it shifts around in ideas. But, I didn't note the slower start tip I do feel like I jump out of the gate too fast. Going to make note of the recording pauses too. I made it longer at beginning because I was trying the 5 second noise level recording but I guess I should have cut it back to 3 secs once I did the noise reduction. Thank you James! As always I really appreciate your great notes!

    Peer Feedback:

    Vast improvement!

    That "slow start" tip may not be in Barbara's book. I got that tip from her in as seminar she conducted at the SAG VO Lab in NYC. I've listened to the audiobook version of her book several times. A really nice lady.

    Use that 5 seconds of room tone for your NR and to fill in the spaces for editing. But cut the beginning back to .5 sec. to 1 sec. Waiting longer than that might give the listener that "Is this thing ever going to start?" kind of feeling. And the 4 - 4.5 sec. between chapters follows along with CD music production - CD tracks are usually separated by 4 sec.

    I'm sure that the light bulbs will be bursting to life in your brain and those "AHA!" moments will pile up as you go through Larry's class. Be diligent and do your homework!

    A word on the "pitch" tool. It's a delicate thing. Going even a titch too far in either direction can cause sonic artifacts in your voice recording. Best to stay away from it, IMHO.

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    Do-it-yourself Acupressure

    Script:

    Acupressure, the Eastern method of massaging certain trigger points on the face, can help minimize fine lines. It also strengthens facial muscles and increases circulation to impart a rosy glow. Cross your middle fingers over your index fingers, then touch each of the following five acupressure points with your index finger and hold gently for one minute. First, touch your hairline, in line with the inner corners of your eyes. Next, touch the bridge of your nose. Then, the outer corners of your eyes. Then, just under your nose. And, finally, touch the top of your jawline, just under the ears.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dperraultmezzo's recording

    I'm just getting started and still don't have my equipment yet. Just looking for feedback on my performance at the moment. Thanks for taking the time to listen!

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    Peer Feedback:

    A very soothing, sumptuous read. It immediately sets the proper mood and keeps the energy relaxing and engaging throughout—all while still sounding crisp and clear to the ear. Well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with rogue1 about the sound of your read, very soothing. It was also relaxing and comforting. For me, it sounded like you were talking very sweetly to someone, which was pleasant to listen to. One thing stood out to me, which was when you pronounced "circulation." When you pronounced cir-cu-LA-tion, the "la" was higher than the rest of the read, which took it a little out of context and out of the soothing sound. Really liked it, though.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated : )

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    Peer Feedback:

    Some good stuff in here. I admire your confidence in speaking so slowly and deliberately--we listen because you really do go about telling us what to do. But I'll bet you could sell the benefits (minimize lines, rosy glow) a bit more enthusiastically without throwing the rest of the read off.

    There are two instances where your pitch rises and makes it sound misleadingly as if the words were the start of a list, on "face" and "fingers."

    I'm hearing a lot of what I'm pretty sure is mouth noise in this and other recordings you've posted. Please don't let it slow the rest of your work down, but you should probably figure out how to minimize or get rid of it. (Wish I could tell you how, 'cause then I'd go fix my own!)

    Peer Feedback:

    That is GREAT feedback. Thank-you!

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    E-Learning instructions for standard written English

    Script:

    This section measures the ability to recognize language that is appropriate for standard written English. There are two types of questions in this section.
    In the first type of question, there are incomplete sentences. Beneath each sentence, there are four words or phrases. You will choose the one word or phrase that best completes the sentence.
    Clicking on a choice darkens the oval. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.
    The second type of question has four underlined words or phrases. You will choose the one underlined word or phrase that must be changed for the sentence to be correct.
    Clicking on an underlined word or phrase will darken it. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear schuldmog's recording

    Hi Mr. Friedman, I am new to the VO industry and recording. Home Studio set-up: Adobe Audition (with added plug in Waves De-Esser) PreSonus AudioBox USB 96 Neumann TLM 102 microphone and pop filter Carpeted floor with sound blankets and Aurolex Acoustics Mudguard I took a class at VO Atlanta with Roy Yokelson (Antland Productions) last March for editing tips in Adobe Audition. Here is what I have applied with the attached recording: Normalized to 100% Reduced excessive peaks by -2DB Cleaned room tone (captured noise print at top then applied to entire file) Scanned and Repaired mouth clicks with De-Clicker Applied Default Tube Modeled Compressor Normalized to -3 Applied Waves De-Esser with default “Female sss” I am curious about these: FFT (none – I am puzzled with this one. Roy suggested 75 First Filter, but I don’t know how to do this in this updated Adobe Audition) Auto Heal for cleaning up remaining mouth noises is my audible incoming breath too loud and distracting? Thank you for your time and expertise and I look forward to hearing your suggestions. Warm best, Susan 917-687-9862

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-98211/script-recording-107803.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I am not sure if you were looking for general feedback here or not but one thing I noticed that I found distracting was your breaths. It sounds like you are taking great breaths that give you all the support you need, which is great, but I am not sure you want those to be heard. You might be able to edit them out or maybe look at using a noise gate to remove them. Nice recording!

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    E-learning Test Taking

    Script:

    This section measures the ability to recognize language that is appropriate for standard written English. There are two types of questions in this section.
    In the first type of question, there are incomplete sentences. Beneath each sentence, there are four words or phrases. You will choose the one word or phrase that best completes the sentence.
    Clicking on a choice darkens the oval. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.
    The second type of question has four underlined words or phrases. You will choose the one underlined word or phrase that must be changed for the sentence to be correct.
    Clicking on an underlined word or phrase will darken it. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear greensli's recording

    I am looking for feedback on pace and whether the emphasis is OK (or am I "pulsing"). I am recording in my living room so there is echo and I know I am not getting rid of all the back ground noise from outside. I appreciate the help - this is hard to do alone.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Its a very clinical script so you capture that style well. your voice is pleasant and pace seems good to me, I would just speak more conversational. Inflection and highlighting words would also help, listen to public service announcements they actually have a lot of inflection,(changes to pitch and tone). I can't comment on recording quality but sounds fine to me. Good luck

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a great voice and I enjoyed your performance as a . Although, I personally agree with rchyoung1 that you can try to sound conversational. It's appropriate for E-learning softwares. Personally, I don't think you're pulsing at all.

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    E-Learning Web-Series for Business Builders

    Script:

    Welcome to episode 8 -- Executing Your Idea. So, have you ever wondered how some people just get it all done? Well in this episode, we'll talk about the 4 steps that make it happen. When you're ready to begin, click "episode 8" on your screen. Ready?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SteveP's recording

    Trying my hand (or lips, as the case may be) at some e-learning scripts. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice overall rich vocal sound and recording quality. There's a whistle on the "F" of 4 steps.

    - touzet -

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, friendly sound, Steve. Very conversational. I agree with Touzet, there was something off with the "f" on the four steps. Otherwise, I really liked it!
    ~Laura

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    Ear Video

    Script:

    Let's look at the parts of the ear. The flap on the outside of your head is called the outer ear. It leads to a long tunnel called the ear canal. At the end of the ear canal is a skin stretched across the tunnel—tight like a drum. This is called the eardrum.
    Let's see what happens to sound waves as they move through the ear. We'll use the sound from a radio as an example. The sounds from the radio travel in waves. The waves are collected by the outer ear and sent through the other parts of the ear to the brain. Now, let's see how each part works.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LDevereux's recording

    I've been focusing on commercial mostly but wanted to try out an explainer type script. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi LDevereux!
    Your voice is so clear, and you are extremely articulate.

    I think the key to this script is in that first sentence, though. It's a familiar/friendly, "Let's take a look". The explainer script asks you to be a little looser and more conversational. I'd even say, it suggests that you're taking pleasure or maybe you're a little in awe of your subject. This may result in a slightly faster pace.

    You have a young sounding voice, so I could imagine someone hiring you to do this kind of script for a 5th-grade health video--it's also kind of written at that level--no Greek/Latin medical terms. Maybe try playing around with how you'd do this script if it were for a group of 10-year-olds versus how you'd do it for a group of college students.

    You don't have to be giddy about the subject, but I think a little more palpable interest would make it perfect.

    I think you'll do great with narration. Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback Erica!

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    Early Childhood Brain Development

    Script:

    Early Childhood Brain Development

    The first three years of life are a period of incredible growth in all areas of a baby's development. A newborn's brain is about 25 percent of its approximate adult weight. But by age 3, it has grown dramatically by producing billions of cells and hundreds of trillions of connections, or synapses, between these cells. In this section you will learn about the many ways parents and caregivers can help children get off to a good start and establish healthy patterns for life-long learning.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear beth.harrison's recording

    Hello, new mic/home studio - how is sound quality? Any thoughts on the read? Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good sound quality, as far as the home studio microphone. I liked your performance very much.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! The sound when I was listening seemed very quiet. I could barely hear you with the volume turned way up. (Of course, I'm listening on a laptop...so please take with a grain of salt.) The read was very professional! You might consider playing with emphasis and/or differentiation for expanding your range.

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    Early Childhood Brain Development

    Script:

    The first three years of life are a period of incredible growth in all areas of a baby's development. A newborn's brain is about 25 percent of its approximate adult weight. But by age 3, it has grown dramatically by producing billions of cells and hundreds of trillions of connections, or synapses, between these cells. In this section you will learn about the many ways parents and caregivers can help children get off to a good start and establish healthy patterns for life-long learning.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesshayes's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126798/script-recording-108629.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good reading. I liked your voice for this topic. For something so informative, you give the topic some life which makes me want to keep listening.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, erisvoice!

    Peer Feedback:

    I really enjoyed listening to this read, great work! The quality of your voice lends itself nicely to this type of work and, as another commenter mentioned, you kept it interesting! Well done!

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    Easy Entertaining

    Script:

    Entertaining at home doesn’t have to be stressful. In this series of lessons, we’ll teach you the secrets of a company clean home as well as the ins and outs of hosting parties, and many other helpful hints. One of the most important aspects of having a successful party is making your home presentable. This can be accomplished with just three simple steps:

    Step number 1. Remove clutter from all public rooms.

    Step number 2. Lock the doors to all private rooms.

    And Step number 3: Concentrate on cleaning where it shows, especially the kitchen and bathroom.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear linda.shortman's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-133593/script-recording-108201.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Linda,

    Your read was good, but I would add a smile while reading and sound more energetic. It sounded a little flat. The tone of your voice was very pleasant.

    Rebecca Ehrenpreis

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey,

    Sounding good - you're going to do well!

    Be careful not to rush through words. For example, "One of the most"... Sounds like they're not important and you're just throwing them away. I know it's hard to slow something down when you naturally want to skip through them. Try putting on little emphasis on the word "One", and the following words will likely follow more slowly.

    Hope this is helpful!

    Geoff

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi there! I thought your voice was really perfect for this type of spot. There were two areas where I felt the words got a bit squished together: "as well as the", and "one of the most". The rest felt clear and I liked the natural flow.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear pmcondon's recording

    The following recording was recorded in my newly finished home studio that I built myself using professional equipment. I would like to know how I could of won the script contest with this audition.

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    Peer Feedback:

    How you could have won that contest with this audition?

    You couldn't. LarryBoy's was excellent. To improve this submission, you'd need to read it more smoothly...take out the choppy delivery. You'd need to remove the breathing and the mouth noise. You'd need to deliver it more conversationally. This sounded like a salesman.

    The vocal also sounds over processed.

    You asked....

    Peer Feedback:

    The tone of you voice is great. I would work on smoothing out the read.Feel yourself really talking to someone and not at someone. As of the recording goes, It sounds a little over processed.Perhaps pull off the mic a bit. If your standing at six inches try standing at 8 inches and bring the gain up a titch if you need to. Hope this helps out.

    Peer Feedback:

    Huh!! Could have saved the $27!

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom needs to start charging for his critiques. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the recording quality was good, but the read did sound a bit choppy.
    I did the same recording for the contest.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear peter.oneillca's recording

    In addition to commercial/promotional, I am also interested in e-learning narration and/or audiobook. Any thoughts on this one? Thanks all.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113513/script-recording-94894.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice, friendly tone but, there's a lot of reverb in this recording. Move closer to the mic. Also, heard a lot breaths when you were pausing.

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    Electricity

    Script:

    Electricity
    Electricity has become the most important source of energy in the world, yet no one has ever seen an electrical charge, and until this century, it was impossible to isolate and study individual charges of electricity. Electricity is a natural phenomenon that comes about because of the negatively and positively charged particles of matter. These particles are tiny parts of atoms, called protons and electrons. When a substance is in its normal state, the charges on these particles are more or less in balance. The natural arrangement of protons and electrons in a substance is a disorganized one. However, when something changes the material -- something as simple as vibration, friction, heat, or being close to another substance –

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear my edits? How is my performance?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina! I enjoyed your read. Very natural and easy to listen to. The read sounds seamless, but I can definitely hear the edits. The vocals between sentences--especially at the beginning--sound too close together to convince my ears that you were breathing anywhere in there. It left me feeling like it was heavily edited. Overall though, I enjoyed hearing you. Thanks for sharing! Joe Redd

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    Electricity

    Script:

    Electricity
    Electricity has become the most important source of energy in the world, yet no one has ever seen an electrical charge, and until this century, it was impossible to isolate and study individual charges of electricity. Electricity is a natural phenomenon that comes about because of the negatively and positively charged particles of matter. These particles are tiny parts of atoms, called protons and electrons. When a substance is in its normal state, the charges on these particles are more or less in balance. The natural arrangement of protons and electrons in a substance is a disorganized one. However, when something changes the material -- something as simple as vibration, friction, heat, or being close to another substance –

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sreagor's recording

    OK, coach, I am back in the saddle. I know, I know. I skipped "source of" der. Don't know how I missed that one!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7374/script-recording-28525.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read was good. It held my attention, you articulated and inflected the important bits well. I'll compare when I get home on some studio Cans and report back later....Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Nodo. I'm just starting out so I appreciate everyone's feedback.

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    Ellis Island

    Script:

    Ellis Island

    From 1892 to 1954, over twelve million immigrants entered the United States through the portal of Ellis Island, a small island in New York Harbor. Ellis Island is located in the upper bay just off the New Jersey coast, within the shadow of the Statue of Liberty. Through the years, this gateway to the new world was enlarged from its original 3.3 acres to 27.5 acres by landfill supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships, excess earth from the construction of the New York City subway system and elsewhere.

    Before being designated as the site of one of the first Federal immigration station by President Benjamin Harrison in 1890, Ellis Island had a varied history. The local Indian tribes had called it "Kioshk" or Gull Island. Due to its rich and abundant oyster beds and plentiful and profitable shad runs, it was known as Oyster Island for many generations during the Dutch and English colonial periods. By the time Samuel Ellis became the island's private owner in the 1770's, the island had been called Kioshk, Oyster, Dyre, Bucking and Anderson's Island. In this way, Ellis Island developed from a sandy island that barely rose above the high tide mark, into a hanging site for pirates, a harbor fort, ammunition and ordinance depot named Fort Gibson, and finally into an immigration station.

    From 1794 to 1890 (pre-immigration station period), Ellis Island played a mostly uneventful but still important military role in United States history. When the British occupied New York City during the duration of the Revolutionary War, its large and powerful naval fleet was able to sail unimpeded directly into New York Harbor. Therefore, it was deemed critical by the United States Government that a series of coastal fortifications in New York Harbor be constructed just prior to the War of 1812.

    After much legal haggling over ownership of the island, the Federal government purchased Ellis Island from New York State in 1808. Ellis Island was approved as a site for fortifications and on it was constructed a parapet for three tiers of circular guns, making the island part of the new harbor defense system that included Castle Clinton at the Battery, Castle Williams on Governor's Island, Fort Wood on Bedloe's Island and two earthworks forts at the entrance to New York Harbor at the Verrazano Narrows. The fort at Ellis Island was named Fort Gibson in honor of a brave officer killed during the War of 1812.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    Very much in the just getting started phase but thought I'd try a longer narrative work, would appreciate any comments on the delivery or the recording quality (Snowball USB mike).

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12286/script-recording-32678.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    rich pipes.

    some of the words get lost in the speed of your delivery.

    As a fellow "basement-voice" guy, I had to learn to increase my range to make certain long pieces sound interesting, especially historical narratives.

    What I would suggest is to put more "smile" in your delivery. Literally, "smile" and "lift your eyebrows" as you do the piece. Ever seen Broadway guys deliver their lines? They 'smile" and 'lift'. I have NO idea why that works, but it sure works for me.

    Regarding recording quality, It's quite clear, I just hear the "room tone" in the signal.
    If you're unable to work in a padded room, this may help.

    http://www.harlanhogan.com/portaboothArticle.shtml

    Keep pushing ever onward!

    Wolf

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, I could tell that this is a straight through read, with no editing at all. I can hear the breaths and everything. And that's not a bad thing, because it shows that you're an excellent reader. The mic doesn't sound bad at all either and your delivery is calm, confident and authoritative. I would say to just try to work on making this sound more like you're relating it to someone and not just reading it.

    I think a good voice and being able to read well are great, but as you know, in order to hold an audience's attention for any length, one needs to engage them by making them feel a part of the story. To do that, you'll want to put more warmth into a read like this, color some words, make the story come to life. I think you have the raw skills for a promising career in VO. The only thing to do now is develop the other skills necessary to succeed. All the best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Basically quite interesting. You voice is all over the place. At the end you lost
    the "barrel-gravel" you started with. Seems you can't make a decision about that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Appreciate the feedback. It appears my issues are the whole "warmth" thing, extending my range, and control. Have yet to get coaching so I guess that's the next step. Thanks again, appreciate the listen as I know it's a long piece compared to the others on the site.

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    Emotional Intelligence excerpt

    Script:

    In this case, Curtis experienced a powerful emotional reaction – anger – at the beginning of the day. Hours after the accident, the emotion was still with him, causing him to be hostile toward his colleagues.

    Physiologically, Curtis remained angry because anger generates a state of nervous-system arousal that persists for a long period. An angry person is more prone to respond in anger to the next irritating stimulus that comes along. So anger builds on anger.

    ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------

    Emotions play a crucial role in your everyday life. Among other functions, they can motivate you to take necessary action, help you understand your own needs and the needs of others, and help you connect with other people and build strong relationships.

    Your emotions can affect virtually every aspect of your life, including the decisions you make, your interactions with others, and your performance, at work or elsewhere. It’s crucial to be in tune with your emotions so that you can recognize and manage them properly.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear 4jcn94's recording

    Trying a new genre that we had discussed.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111437/script-recording-105173.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey 4j,

    I thought the breathing and pacing was great on this. I felt that some enunciation was lost in certain words. the -ed in experienced and something in necessary that i cant quite put my ear on, though not enough for me to lose you.

    Recording quality wise there is definitely room for improvement here. Im definitely hearing a lot of reflections, almost "bathroomish". there are some simple things you can do to improve this without spending. recording in a room with lots of soft surfaces, like a carpeted bedroom and/or try to build a soft pillow/mattress/moving blanket fort around your recording area can work wonders until you are ready to invest.

    Good read, look forward to hearing more from you.
    Best,
    Nate

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    English Test Intro

    Script:

    This section measures the ability to recognize language that is appropriate for standard written English. There are two types of questions in this section.
    In the first type of question, there are incomplete sentences. Beneath each sentence, there are four words or phrases. You will choose the one word or phrase that best completes the sentence.
    Clicking on a choice darkens the oval. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.
    The second type of question has four underlined words or phrases. You will choose the one underlined word or phrase that must be changed for the sentence to be correct.
    Clicking on an underlined word or phrase will darken it. After you click on Next and Confirm Answer, the next question will be presented.

    64 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear fauldssa's recording

    Looking for feedback on delivery, not audio quality. Thanks!!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-163239/script-recording-111481.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the pacing was great. In that type of environment, your voice was easily understood. I realize you didn't want feedback on the audio but I did notice volume fluctuations and it sounded as if head movement caused the fluctuations. Other than that, it was a good read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Irvj: I really appreciate the feedback. I'm still working on my studio so that was from my headset/mic. I will watch for that fluctuation on future recordings. Thanks!!

    Peer Feedback:

    A good read. Technically the recording was a little tinny and there were a lot of breaths that should have been edited out. Once you get your studio gear sorted out you'll be amazed with how much better you will sound. Still, your read was nice and clear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Docr15: Agree on the tech comments and thanks for the feedback!!!

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    esl

    Script:

    Hi. I am Marianne / Marcel. Let’s repeat some sentences:

    I live in a big city. I am married. I do not have any children. I work in an office.

    Good! Now, let’s repeat these sentences once again, but more quickly this time

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dalekay's recording

    I am very new and considering voice over as a new career. I am wondering if I have potential and what I should work on.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-84476/script-recording-67412.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Dale. Welcome to the Site. You have a good voice but if I as a newbie would chose a script for an introductory post I would find one which showcases my natural speaking voice/accent that would give the listener more material to make a critical judgement. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great work! I don't know the ins and outs of ESL voice-over, but the pacing seemed right, and the conversational sentences sounded conversational. I hear what might be a little room echo, but recording quality is pretty great for starting out.

    Welcome to the forum.

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dale,

    Welcome to the forum, with you the best of luck with your new journey!

    You do have a very nice voice, and I too, thought that your pacing was pretty good. Keep up the great work! Oh, if you need an inexpensive idea for a booth, you can visit my youtube page, just type in "Healthyful" My New Portable Vocal Booth. Hope that helps!!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Dale,
    This was really good for a first read! Heavy on the enunciation, but for an ESL script, that would likely be called for.

    The recording quality was not bad at all, either. I do highly recommend checking out Carol's portable booth video. I thought it was really well done and works great!

    Best of luck to ya!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dale, good job especially for someone just starting out. If i were to give you any advice i would just say you might want to slow down a little bit between the sentences that our suppose to be repeated. Otherwise Keep up the good work

    Peer Feedback:

    Release the over-articulation. Read it conversationally as if you were actually speaking to a person. Truthfully, this was WAY too harsh in the diction/articulation department. Forgivable in a new poster. But don't concentrate so much on hitting every syllable and you can bring a more natural read to your mic.

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    eSuicideTalk

    Script:

    eSuicideTalk will help you understand suicide better and become more aware of it. Through this program you will learn about things that you can do to help prevent suicide in your community. For many people, participating in a program about suicide can also be personal....you might be worried for someone you care about, or concerned about your own risk of suicide. In this program, we’ll explore the question, “How do we talk about suicide?"

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111445/script-recording-99707.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your voice for this! This is a great read, my only advice is to enunciate a little more. Practice hitting those T's and D's and other stops at the ends of words without it sounding too forced. I know people don't talk like that in real life conversations, but in VO it's very important. Also, I love the tone of your voice, how sympathetic you sound. However, toward the end it almost sounded TOO sympathetic to the point where your voice started to quiver a little. Keep that tone, because it is a serious read, but maybe make it more matter-of-fact so you don't get too invested in the seriousness of it. Hope this helps!

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    Excerpt from Phone Operation Instructions Script

    Script:

    That’s the basic over-view of the common functions you’ll use with the phone system. Now let’s walk you through the different buttons but most of them will be pretty familiar to you. We have the speaker button down here in the corner next to the mute button. Over to the left we have the volume control. You’ll notice that if the receiver is on the cradle, or hung up

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Geldy7's recording

    I'm VERY new to formal voice-over training. I've just signed up for my training with Edge but in the meantime I am a Coporate Trainer for a tile and stone distributor and am developing training videos for use on our training website. What is driving me CRAZY is the breaths I seem to struggle eliminating from my recordings. You'll notice in this 20 second clip I take some noticable breaths. Any tips for eliminating those or does that just come with experience in controlling your breathing while recording? ANY FEEDBACK is appreciate by this up and comer in the industry. THANKS!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4627/script-recording-35883.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, very nice tone; has that "person next door" vibe to it.
    EQing is nice as well.

    I am new to this but have been critiqued about tempo- so I'll say it is a tad fast: first sentence seems a little choppy-let the information"absorb" before moving on.

    Watch out in editiing stages: breathing and room ambience can be heard.

    I think in a very short time you will be there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Possibly a bit fast at the start..but you settled down. I could see it on a video. The breathing is something you will develop the more practice you do...exercises, exercises etc etc...

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    Excerpt from Phone Operation Instructions Script

    Script:

    That’s the basic over-view of the common functions you’ll use with the phone system. Now let’s walk you through the different buttons but most of them will be pretty familiar to you. We have the speaker button down here in the corner next to the mute button. Over to the left we have the volume control. You’ll notice that if the receiver is on the cradle, or hung up

    35 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Andre Hughes's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-42270/script-recording-53850.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Mr Hughes
    Something is really wrong with the recording quality, the first 7 second is missing. Hard to give you advice on performance like this.
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is way off on the read. I stopped at "let's walk you through the different buttons" due to the sound. In that short listen, I heard a definite 'urban' sound that can and can't work for you. If you're shooting for neutral, you'll want to work on that.

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    Explainer Video

    Script:

    The Incubation Phase
    You work full-time on your business model implementation. You leave your regular workplace for 3 to 6 months, depending on how well your team performs.
    You grow personally and develop new skills. Until your idea becomes a CORPORATE STARTUP.
    Wow! Look at you now! You did it.
    And all you had to do to get started was to submit your idea and then follow the process step by step.
    As easy as that.
    Are you Ready?
    Shape the future of mobility with your idea!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Carman's Voice's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-147005/script-recording-108098.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent read, interpretation and delivery! Great energy that you brought to the piece. I envisioned what you were describing. I liked the music choice too.

    My only suggestion is to smooth out the sentence... "And all you had to do to get started.." by reading it through without pausing; try increasing the speed in the sentence just a bit. In other words, it sounded less smooth than the rest of it. It was the only part of the recording where I paused for a minute as a listener. Everything else really grabbed me and engaged me and I enjoyed listening to it! Great job!

    Thanks for sharing!

    Grant

    Peer Feedback:

    Music track may have been a bit loud on this...
    - touzet -

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    Facebook Etiquette

    Script:

    Hey Facebook users – uh, here are a couple of suggestions if you're over the age of nine…

    Some people have this idea that the number of "friends" you have on Facebook is a status of your popularity in real life. That may be true if these "friends" are people whom you know offline, and not strangers whom you randomly add while browsing through the Facebook network. But, hey, go ahead and let everyone know that you have 2300 "friends." That's sure to convince people that you're really popular.

    Secondly, no one cares what you ate last night unless Oprah's personal chef cooked it or a naked Kardashian served it to you personally. Stop posting about your wonderful dinner at the Olive Garden, because the only person who wants to hear about it is Olive Garden's customer service. We all understand that your dinner was one of the best of your life, but let's face it: we'd rather look at pictures of babies and kittens than hear about your Fettucini Alfredo.

    33 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Patrick Kamler's recording

    Wanted to cut loose and have a little fun with a script. Any and all comments welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Facebook Users.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Patrick,

    You also have a nice voice too! I heard a lot of breaths, can you edit them out? Also watch out for your volume, sometimes I heard it get louder. Were you moving in and out from your mic? You may have to work on your breath control, this was a lengthy script and it took me a while to learn how to breath properly. I noticed that I am not editing out a too many breaths these days. You will get it, keep practicing and you should google "Belly Breathing" it will train you to be able to use your breath the right way and give your body more oxygen, : )

    Keep on Truckin, you will get there!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Conversational tone was pretty good. it seemed pretty smooth. watch out for getting a little singsongy. a couple lines starting edging that way: "2300 friends", "wonderful dinner at the Olive Garden"….I get that you're going for tongue-in-cheek, but maybe go a little more wry with it.

    Dude, the breaths were beyond distracting. wow. please edit those out.

    I do like the conversational tone. it's not easy to pull off.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice read but I think you could have more fun with the read. It felt like you were holding back a bit. I loved the way you read the first few sentences felt like you were talking to me but the rest felt like you were being safe. I recommend going the extra mile and really cut loose you'll have more fun to.

    Peer Feedback:

    I heard all of the things others have mentioned in this recording but I'm sure they're all fairly easily resolved even if it takes some time to break old habits. Good luck on your voice work and I look forward to hearing more recordings from you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh,my! I love this copy! Because I HATE facebook! I really want to take a stab at this one! (Are those enough exclamation points?!)

    (This sounds like a Jerry Seinfeld or Louis Black routine. Where did you get the copy?)

    Like Carol and Dave mentioned, the breaths are really distracting. You may not have to edit all of them out, but there are just a few too many. You might also minimize the volume of the ones you keep in.

    And to Carol's comment about the volume fluctuation - Do you use compression? That might even it out some.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto the sentiment about Facebook. Nice read. The material is such that I can see the opportunity to elicit numerous interpretations all of which would be appropriate to the material. No slight on yours. Well done. I'll be interested to see what others do with it. Great read, great script.

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    Fiduciary

    Script:

    Let's get started with what it means to be a fiduciary. A fiduciary is defined as a person to whom property or power is entrusted for the benefit of another. The simplest way to understand it is think about trust. Your client must trust you to put his or her interests above all others, including your own. It's kind of like being a parent. We expect parents to do what is best for their children.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear fw_jackson's recording

    Working on acoustics, how is the sound quality? I am using a VO: 1-A mic mounted on a Axcess Ables SF-101KIT Recording Studio Microphone Isolation Shield with Stand, facing an open closet. The audio interface is a Steinberg UR 22 mkII, and I recorded it in Audacity.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-126904/script-recording-101031.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it! The quality of sound was very good. I appreciated your matter of fact way of interpreting the script. It was much like a first person script. Pacing and clarity was well done. Nice job!

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    Film vs Digital Cameras

    Script:

    Traditional film cameras still hold many advantages over digital cameras, starting with their lower average cost. If you plan to travel, you may not want to spend your time worrying about memory cards and batteries. Film cameras use film that is readily available around the globe, and their batteries tend to last exponentially longer than the batteries of their digital counterparts. Film cameras typically yield better results when shooting in low-light situations (especially without a flash) or when capturing action shots, whether it's your children's soccer matches or the running of the bulls in Pamplona.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear irvj's recording

    Testing new processing settings.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-16992/script-recording-110528.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job, I enjoyed the energy in your voice and your performance was awesome! Good recording quality too

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for sharing. Your voice is nice. I feel like your energy started off nice, but got lost in "... or when capturing action shots, whether it's your children's soccer matches or the running of the bulls in Pamplona." The recording quality sounds good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. I’ll definitely work on energy consistency. Appreciate you guys!!

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    Final Quiz

    Script:

    Final Quiz -Welcome to the Final Quiz section. This quiz has ten questions. Select the best answer for each question and click Submit. The passing score is 8 correct answers. At the end of the quiz, your score will be displayed. Good Luck. Click Start to begin.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Happy New Year! First, Thanks to jamesromic who gave me the 411 on how to delete a file. If it is a paid job, you can't post the script (I have permission). 2013 was great and goals for 2014 are more commercial and more e-learning. This was the last of close to 48 "scripts" or files. Each one ran from a sentence or 2 to 5 paragraphs. Tone of voice must be consistent throughout, no tonal changes from file to file, so a lot of comparing. It's technically challenging and you really have to be organized. :) So I humbly offer this sample to the masses! It's been a while I recorded this with an AT 875 short bodied shotgun into a WA 12 preamp. NS1@10% and a very cool limiter by fabfilter. All comments welcome, drop a line! TedVoInSpain

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-65824.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds really good to me Ted! Nice up tone, conversational and personal delivery. Really good read. Javi told me you were doing quite well over there! Great to hear.

    Sound is really good too. Nice to see something new from you. But as busy as you've been, WORKING, it's better to know that you're getting the work.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're welcome, Ted. It seems that you can edit your critiques, but not the your own posted recording or comment. But I get into a bind there too. You can edit the body of your critique, but if you need to play the recording again for reference, it's not there and neither are the critiques from others (if there were any). So, I have to open another browser window to access the forum for that. I mentioned these glitches to David Goldberg. He told me that the website is going to be revamped soon. That was quite a while ago.

    Peer Feedback:

    They were 're-designing the website' about 2 years ago. Drupal is beeyotch in a lot of ways and that's what they've got the website designed through.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good Ted. Nice Job, I looked for you on Skype a little while back, right after hearing from you. Hope this finds you well. Keep up the great work,, hope to join you in the working world some day.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ted, I really liked the up tone too. But "Final Quiz" was a little high pitch to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ted, really great work!, Wonderful vocal quality, clear & crisp enunciation. Hope to also join you in the V/O working world.

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    Fitness Equipment

    Script:

    Safety is important when performing either the hack squat or leg press. Make sure there is a built in end range of motion stopper so that if you fail, you’ll be able to safely get off the machine without being crushed by the sled. Different machines have different weight releases and catches, so make sure you’re familiar with the machine you’re using.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear alex.taylor11's recording

    Shoddy recording quality, as this was recorded through my computer mic. However any feedback you would have on the interpretation would be appreciated. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130208/script-recording-111596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Decent cut. The flow needs to be more conversational and flowing though. Some words were too emphasized, and the "drama" was a turn off. "Without being" .. "make sure" were some key points where the inflection when too far up in your voice register.

    The phrasing "a built in end" is a tough one! Suggest -- linking the following ... "built in" as "buil-tin"... and then say "end" that way "end" is more clear to the listener.

    Great job and practice builds confidence !

    Peer Feedback:

    Asides from the quality of the recording your read felt like something I'd hear on a fitness infomercial. However I feel like the energy was a little low and as the previous comment stated it could have used a little more conversational tone to help it flow a little better. This was a tough one, but you did an overall good job. Keep practicing.

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.
    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Brian C. Topping's recording

    I would be grateful for all feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2061/script-recording-25848.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice tone and good voice for this piece. Maybe a little more emotion needed for the line: your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Overall, very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    love the tone of your voice, some of the read was very good and conversational, some of it sounded kind of choppy, like it was being read. it seemed to go back and forth between the two a few times. maybe a little over-articulation in some spots IMO.
    like andy said, maybe just a bit more emotion would fix it.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you could make the delivery a little more conversational, it would flow better. It feels mechanical in much of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi BT. I really like your voice. It sounds confident, and great tone. (and, I like the topic being read). I hear hints of an East Coast accent, maybe NY. That's great, I think you should use it more.

    I agree on the flow being more conversational. and with the comment about choppiness.

    I felt like you were reading the piece, instead of narrating a pleasurable video about fly-fishing. I personally think that one can ditch some of the strict diction when the topic is conversational and leisurely. During classes, I get called out on using too much diction all the time ("you sound like you're on NPR"), and am trying to attenuate it somewhat -- so I speak from experience.

    I think some of the choppiness and breaths could simply be edited out, instead of retakes.

    I hope I'm not coming off as too critical. "Those who can, do; those who can't, give copious free advice.."

    I look forward to your next reads.

    DS.

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.
    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12286/script-recording-31424.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy TJ,

    Your voice is a good fit for this type of material, but you sound like you are reading it. Pretend you are speaking to an old friend, and describing the joys of your favorite hobby...?

    Also, you do not reflect any of the happiness or joy of the piece. Perhaps try putting a little smile on your face as you read this (you'd be amazed. It works!)

    I hope that this helps. You have a good voice for this, keep plugging!

    Regards,

    Steve O'Sullivan

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.

    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    My second pass at this script.Trying to be a bit brighter and more conversational than the first take. Critiques? Bring it on!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12286/script-recording-31780.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! Where is my fly rod...where?
    The copy was good.
    Recording quality - your voice was too low. This is about outdoor adventure, fishing on the water, etc.
    Vocal performance - was like someone doing a meditation and relaxation read. I would like to hear more emotion and inflection to capture the excitement of that activity.

    Peer Feedback:

    I too would liike to hear a little more emotion. I also think you need to get a bit closer to the microphone, it sounded a little distant. Try it again and repost.

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    Forcing entry

    Script:

    The "interior attack" is one of the most effective fire ground tactics! But to succeed,
    it means getting inside the building fast! This frequently neans forcing entry, using a flathead axe, into a structure where access is locked, blocked or non-existent.

    While prying doors is still an important skill that every fire-fighter must master,
    the alarming rise in crime in this country, combined with advance lock technology and
    increased security consciousnes, has made prying tactics slower and less effective.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    This is a significant departure from "Grace." it is an instructional only for fire-fighters.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6638/script-recording-32524.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Okay, Henry, here's my take on the piece.

    The read itself did not seem to match the piece given. Your overall tone seemed to be more suited for a documentary piece instead of a narration piece that seems to come from a training piece.

    The recording quality also seemed somewhat poor as it made your voice seemed muddled and distorted, to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, don't make sense of your comment. Recording seems clear. You didn't mean the read was not matched to the script? You meant you didn't think the read worked.
    You indicated confusion as to whether this was a documentary or narration instead of a training piece. I'll accept that as a comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Another question. What are you using for speakers? Maybe your sound is muddled.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your serious tone for this serious subject, a life-and-death one. Your phrasing sounded good to me, pauses where called for but otherwise not. Good example of this is the line "This frequently means forcing entry..." You have the voice of one who has a lifetime of experiences and, therefore, credibility. Good sound quality from my monitors.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bill, you got to me. That's exactly what I was after. Fire-fighting is the nastiest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that does it! So long, Bill and all the true-believers. I;ve had it.
    The mumbler!

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    Free Financial Advice - Welcome

    Script:

    Our goal is to teach and explain the fundamental rules of money, wealth and debt management. More importantly, we’ll teach you a new way to look at your spending, saving, investing and debt management decisions so that you can make informed decisions as to how to optimize and manage your money and debt.

    91 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear linda.shortman's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-133593/script-recording-107980.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you had a very clear and direct speaking voice. Two things that could improve things further was a little more inflection (emotion) in the material to give a sense that you care about the material and the other thing was there was some distortion in the recording. That said, you read it well, varied the list well and had a great pace.

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty straightforward, nice voice. No notes other than that hum on your recording needs some attention.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for pointing out that hum. I had to listen to it a few times before I heard it. I'm still learning the settings, I think it's a volume issue. Thanks for the feedback.

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    French E-Learning "Excusez-moi"

    Script:

    In this lesson, we are going to learn how to use “Excusez-moi” and other words when apologizing in French. It’s never too late to show your good manners with Québécois people. We should use “Excusez-moi” in formal situations, such as when you’re ordering something in bars or restaurants. For example, “Excusez-moi, un café s’il vous plait”. Excuse me, a coffee please. “Excusez-moi, un café s’il vous plait”.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear alex.taylor11's recording

    Just recorded this through my computer mic as I haven't received my pro grade mic yet, so I know the sound quality isn't great. Any feedback you would have on the interpretation is really appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130208/script-recording-111366.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice journey through different pitches and the tone was right for an educational piece. The 'S' sound was a bit heavy in words like lesson and excusez. A little mouth noise crept in before "We should use". I liked how you slowed down the French phrase the second time you said it for ease of learning.

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    Frog and Toad Reading Comprehension

    Script:

    Let's pause here. Did you follow along? Great! Now, let's talk about the story. I'll ask you a question, and you can select the answer with your stylus. Ready? When does Toad want Frog to wake him up? April, May, or June? That's right! Now, what month is it in the story? Oops, try again. Not quite--try looking back at the last page again. That's right! You answered both questions--go ahead and turn the page when you're ready to keep reading.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesskaufman7's recording

    This is just for practice, NOT for recording quality. I recorded it on my ipad with no mic. :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83796/script-recording-72764.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice, very well suited to the material. I think your tone matched the script spot on. Considering you recorded this on your ipad, the sound is good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jess,

    I really think you nailed the emotion you needed on that type of script. Impressive !!

    Keep it up!

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    Fundamentals of the Material Library

    Script:

    Welcome to Module 1, “Fundamentals” of the Material Library version 4.2.1, Web-based training. This course takes approximately sixty minutes to complete.

    Module 1, “Fundamentals” of the Material Library 4.2.1 Web-based training course contains four lessons. Module 2, “Advanced Applications”, contains four lessons. Most of the lessons in these modules end with a Knowledge Check to measure the user’s learning. The user must successfully complete the Knowledge Check to continue to the next lesson. In order to be issued a license to install Material Library version 4.2.1 onto his or her computer, the user must complete the final Knowledge Checks in Modules 1 and 2 with a minimum score of 80 percent.

    56 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Steven Anderson's recording

    I've been looking for an improved way to process my audio, and I now think I've found it. I'd like feedback on this audition for a WBT. Thanks! -Steven

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7852/script-recording-35147.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! You handle this script so well! I noticed just a couple of small tongue twister moments but all in all I am quite impressed. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Monica! Thanks for the feedback. You would be right - I could not get these words to play nice with the rest of the phraseology:
    the Material Library 4.2.1

    But I'm glad you dig it. Here's hoping I get the gig. :)

    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steve!
    I´m not going to comment on the technical side, ´cause there are more people here that are masters in that area!
    Overall ,I liked your performance, sounded professional and I do believe the pace and inflection were right here.
    One little observation: the words "learning", "lesson" and "computer", sound exactly the same and breaks the smoothness of the read. How would your work those words?
    The funny thing is, that the following word to each of those words, begin on the same tone....? Interesting pattern.... All the best, Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Having been on the employee end of many a computer training session, I can honestly say this was nearly flawless. The only thing I noticed, performance wise, was actually saying the "Material Library 4.2.1". To me whenever that part was mentioned, it sounded a wee bit rushed. Other than that it sounded VERY good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done Steve. One thing right at the beginning I found was that you were introducing Module 1 "Fundamentals". Personally I think there should have been a slight pause to create a focus on that since it just rolled onto "the material library..." you want to introduce the listener to each NEW section they are going to learn. Great job tho!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, everyone. I booked it! (*dances*)

    Eva - I actually did not notice either of those patterns before this comment. Good catch! I'll try to pay attention to my patterns a little more in my reads as a check on it getting stale. Thanks!

    brimon - Thanks! Yeah, Material Library 4.2.1 is one humbling tongue twister. I'm glad you liked the read.

    danielk - I've started to do that more in my WBT reads after listening back a couple of times and looking at comments (like yours!): "Welcome to (pause) (ClassName) (pause). This course...." I think I got intimidated by "Material Library..." so I rushed it instead of taking my time. Good observation.

    Thanks again! The feedback is really helpful.
    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounded good. You need to not break up the 'In order to be issued...' sentence as much as you did.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,
    I thought your performance was excellent, with crystal clear voice and diction, a tone that was confident and instructional, and pacing that seemed right. The quality of the audio sounded like it should. I think your audition is very strong.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice for instructional audio.. Clear and precise.. Great recording quality.. No need to get into any nit picky stuff.. If this was a job, I'm sure you'd polish it up where needed...
    I'd listen to your instructions..

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    Gardening for Dummies

    Script:

    Unless you live in an area where summers are really short, you're better off sowing some types of vegetables directly in a garden. Large-seeded, fast-growing vegetables, such as corn, melons, squash, beans, and peas, usually languish if they're grown in containers for even a day or two too long.

    Before transplanting your seedlings, you need to prepare your soil and your garden must be ready to plant. When setting out plants in biodegradable peat pots, make slits down the sides of the pots or gently tear the sides to enable the roots to push through. Also, tear off the lip, or top, of the pot, so that it doesn't stick up above the soil surface and pull moisture out of the soil.

    Thank you for your feedback! David Mangini

    45 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dmangini's recording

    Just practicing and choosing material for my demo. Does this work for my voice? David

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3498/script-recording-24993.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice works well for this material. Would be nice to hear your full voice for better judgement, but as you posted here, I'd say it's a match. Don't care for the mic, but you're just asking for opinion on the voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your read was very good for a "how to". If this is for a demo, I think you need a better mike....

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! Like your voice; goes well with the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd say you have the voice for the script but material for a demo? Definitely not. This is a snooze piece. Unless that's what your going after. As bait I don't think you're going to catch anything with it. The read was fine.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback.
    As for the microphone; I completely agree this mic is only good for practice and experimentation when away from home. It's just a simple mic connected to my iPhone with a simple editing app (iRig). I would not use this for production work.
    Richurd, thanks for the feedback on the boring choice of material; I'll consider that.
    David

    Peer Feedback:

    SOMEone has to read these things! It might not be snazzy, but there's a market for these books. You should have something representing on your narration demo...

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    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear christi's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7295/script-recording-24317.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    very clear and smooth pace...i like it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone, very pleasant voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nlice! Your voice works well with this type of genre!

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    Girl's On-Course Survival Guide to Golf--Puppies

    Script:

    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf
    Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    59 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sheri Speaks's recording

    I found a very female-centric piece for an educational narration on golf. Would appreciate your thoughts on my delivery and the script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1157/script-recording-24214.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds very nice and professional to me as a newbee to the VO world.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Sheri, your conversational tone was great. The topic was really funny. : )

    Peer Feedback:

    Funny script, done well.

    Peer Feedback:

    HA HA HA....loved this Sheri...good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Sheri!

    I love this read and thought it was both hilarious and helpful/empathetic. I thought you could have brought even more of the humor into it, however, by really relishing in the language. For instance, that last word "puppies" when referring to the breasts is so hilarious and you made it sound quite nice. Adding a little more wink to the read with words like that, I thought would bring it to life even more. But overall your energy was great and it was nice and clear.

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    Give Forward

    Script:

    Jeff recently found out he is sick. Though he has insurance, his medical bills are piling up and up. Luckily, jeff’s got a great friend jessica. She decided she wasn’t going to let jeff fight his battle alone. So she went to give forward.com. She started a fundraiser and shared jeffs story. By the time jeff found out about his page friends, family and even strangers had already contributed over $6000.

    67 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DominicCarlos's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-135134/script-recording-109530.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read- my initial reaction is once you get to "luckily" your tone could switch to a more positive/excited sound so the beginning of the read is depressing the middle is "its looking up for Jeff thanks to Jessica" and the ending is "WOW look what she accomplished with give forward.com!"

    Peer Feedback:

    Quality is great. Certainly switch to a more positive tone when you get to the positive segments of a script. I think you could have emphasized "give forward.com" a little more, and 6,000 Dollars i think could have been delivered with a more excited tone.
    Voice is great! keep up the good work!

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    Gobi Desert

    Script:

    The Gobi desert of Central Asia is one of the earth’s most desolate places. It’s million square kilometers of sand dunes, sculpted badlands, and saw toothed mountains are alternately scorched by summer’s high latitude sun and frozen by winter’s Siberian winds. It’s not a place to explore unprepared. Crossing vast uninhabitable areas, between a sprinkling of oasis, requires planning akin to the siege tactics for scaling a Himalayan peak or traversing the Antarctic Continent.

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ECT893's recording

    Thought that my foreboding monotone might be suited to this stark narration. Your opinion? Thanks for taking the time to comment, this site is a neat learning tool. The music is "Myself When Young" from the 1970 Cadet album 'The Rubaiyat of Dorothy Ashby'.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4510/script-recording-25311.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think I got your "foreboding monotone . . . stark narration" and lack of emotion intent. However, the sterile and choppy delivery--aside from being monotonous--did not convince me to think twice about visiting this arid, isolated wasteland without serious preparation and planning. The read was . . . well, reading. Example: "It's not A place"--long A--is reading, not conversation. I did not hear urgent warning "for all ye who dare enter." I did not get who you were talking to. Nor did I hear key word script clues: desolate, scorched, frozen, uninhabitable. What I liked: music choice & pace. I'm not an engineer, but sound seemed clear and clean. Best of luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. I posted this reading more as a lark, maybe hoping against hope that it would somehow be perfect for the material? Well, rats - maybe there just isn't a place for my robot voice and I'd better get back on the path of discovering 'warmth' and 'personableness'. Again, I appreciate your input in helping me to find the right tone that a potential casting agent will be looking for.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Again ETC893--
    Remember, mine is only one take on your read. The "right tone" is the one that gets the gig. I wouldn't assume "there isn't a place for your robot voice." In Voice Land, there's room for every voice--just a matter of reaching that listener who "gets" your delivery (again, the one with the checkbook). I'm new to this forum, and I like that the feedback encourages flexibility in telling the story--which in turn builds technique. Keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like a flatter read on narratives. this one might have been a little too flat, and the pace seemed quick in some places where you could've taken a little more time. You might try editing in pauses in certain areas, as if you were laying down a track for a documentary.

    I think your voice is perfectly suited for this style of read. Not every narration has to be Sam Elliot.

    I like the Egyptian sound bed (very desertie) - you might've tried a Chinese or Mongolian theme (seeing as the Gobi is mostly in China) - but that's neither here nor there...

    Nicely done

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    Golf Tips Magazine

    Script:

    In the “Star Wars” movies, the Jedi Knights harnessed the mystical powers of The Force to fight the Evil Empire. Wouldn’t it be great to call upon an all-powerful energy to fight ‘Ol Man Bogey? Truth is, you can, by harnessing the forces of simple physics. In order to move any object, force must be applied. If you paid any attention in high-school physics, you would be aware of this…and you would recall Newton’s second law of motion. Newton tells us that force is a combination of mass and acceleration. So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives. So, next time on the tee…may The Force be with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mhare11's recording

    Found this in the Edge library. Not sure if it was really taken from a magazine, but I envisioned it as part of a series of quick golf tip videos, with a little sense of humor to it. Looking for any and all feedback - thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97875/script-recording-91357.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, you're working the words too much. It sounds more like an uncomfortable lecturer trying to draw the humor out than an amusing golf instruction.

    But you hit your stride here:

    "So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives."

    The delivery was very smooth, easy and relatable. Then it got strident again for the last line. Trying to "force" the analogy. ("Force" - Get it?)

    Yes, this is probably meant to be an instructional video on golf tips. But you want to relate this information to one person at a time. So (if you golf), pick a good golfing buddy to explain Newton's Second Law of Motion and how it applies to a golf swing. It's amusing enough without trying so hard (working the words).

    The other thing is to take a little time here and there. After your setup (the first sentence), you ask a question (albeit rhetorical). So let your audience (your golfing buddy) ponder that for a mili-second or two. Then you give the amazing answer that it's actually possible and explain how. It's like the Good Witch in The Wizard of Oz telling
    Dorothy that she had the power within her to go home all along.

    Recording quality is generally good. Did you apply any FX processing? It sounds closer to a raw recording than a fully produced finished product.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. I was actually feeling a little unsure about certain parts of it, for the very things you point out. Feeling sort of "actor-ish", if that's a word, and not as natural. So figured I'd see what others thought.
    The only processing was noise removal. At this point I'm working out of a closet with blankets hung on the walls. Sometimes I hear this low hum in the background, sometimes I don't. I turn off the AC and anything else that's running, but I can't seem to figure out where it comes from. So when I hear it, I use the noise removal feature of Audacity. Seems to remove it pretty well - but I'd love to figure out what it is and just get rid of it.
    Thanks for the feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    Is it an electronic type hum (like tuning in a short wave radio) or a static-like hum (like when a broadcast signs off)?

    If it's electronic sounding, like a steady wavering sound with pitches, it's more than likely your cabling or microphone picking up some king of electronic interference - coiled or crossed cabling, bad cabling, florescent lighting, house wiring, a bad surge protector, even the proximity of your mic to your interface or computer.

    If it's static, it's more than likely that your mic is picking up and amplifying ambient noise.

    NR can take care of a lot of that. Try using a high pass filter set at about 60Hz - 70Hz to roll off the lower rumble frequencies. It won't effect your voice - vocal frequencies don't get that low.

    You're also going to want to investigate fiddling with a little EQ to give your sound a little more "body" and clarity (sharpness) - to create a "fuller" sound. The settings won't be very drastic, just little tweaks.

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    Golf Tips Magazine

    Script:

    Golf Tips Magazine: Edge Script

    In the “Star Wars” movies, the Jedi Knights harnessed the mystical powers of The Force to fight the Evil Empire. Wouldn’t it be great to call upon an all-powerful energy to fight ‘Ol Man Bogey? Truth is, you can, by harnessing the forces of simple physics. In order to move any object, force must be applied. If you paid attention in high-school physics, you would be aware of this…and you would recall Newton’s second law of motion. Newton tells us that force is a combination of mass and acceleration. So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives. So, next time on the tee…may The Force be with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    Wanted to get away from audiobooks for awhile, and try some e-learning. Wanted to be more playful so I chose this one, which seemed a fitting tribute to the upcoming Star Wars movie.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105999/script-recording-86067.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,

    Your voice and delivery sound good. Your quality is good as well, sounds like you have a pretty well treated space.

    One critique, I'm hearing a lot of clicks at the ends of phrases. I think those are your edits in the DAW. Are you using room tone to cover up the edits? Or are you just deleting tracks and pushing them together?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks! The clicks may be from my mouth or maybe my hands...I didn't edit it. Did it in one take. Still learning how to use Audacity so my editing technique (or any technical knowledge beyond pushing record button) is pretty much below basic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, lots of mouth noise and extraneous breathing. Keep hydrated and practice stringing longer phrases together on one breath. (But if you have a condition - like asthma - in which you find that difficult to do, consider strategically editing some of them out to get the phrases to flow more naturally.)

    From the top: You're working the words too hard - to the point that this is sounding like a children's story. With the understanding that it's totally unintentional on your part, it comes close to an attitude of sounding condescending - or at the very least that (as an adult) I'm being talked down to - like I don't understand what the words "Evil Empire" mean.

    Furthermore, consider your audience. Avid golfers are nutz! (A grave generalization, I know, but somewhat true. Why would a friend of mine who is a "scratch golfer" go out and spend thousands of dollars on clubs and thinking he's going to become the next Tiger Woods?) And competitive golfers are considered great athletes. (But, c'mon, look at some of these guys. Walking around the links is one thing, but I'd challenge them to run the 220 dash without keeling over.) Either way, these folks are serious! So, the instructional tone of this kind of thing needs to sound authoritative instead of story-like.

    UNRELATED TO THIS READ

    You asked in a previous audiobook read how to deal with page turns.

    Barbara Rosenblat (and other big-time audiobook narrators) usually request the loose leaf manuscript (or "galley" as it is called in publishing) rather than the book proper. (At her level, the physical book and the audiobook usually are published simultaneously.) What she does is place 2 page stacks on the music stand in front of her at a time and very delicately draws the next page over to the finished pile, trying not to make a rustling sound. Doesn't always work, in which case she leaves a slight pause for editing. She almost always (99.99% of the time) goes to a studio to do her recording with a director and engineer. She doesn't record at home - she has an aversion to learning what a DAW is.

    Most other people (including myself) read from a tablet. I either get sent a PDF, Word file, Kindle or Nook version of the book. I can even make notes for myself - difficult pronunciations, highlight logical places to breathe in run-on sentences, mistakes I've made to correct with punch-ins, etc. I can even change the font size and line spacing to be more readable for me, and swiping my finger across the screen makes virtually no noise.

    NOT A COMMERCIAL ENDORSEMENT

    Larry Hudson

    http://www.larryhudsonvo.com/#!__vo-heaven

    is offering a relatively inexpensive 5-week webinar based course on Audacity. Well worth the $150 to learn how to effectively use the software. Here's a link:

    https://docs.google.com/forms/d/1AUsFxbIzAM_j5NBoydAT9ffdsA3NfNc5mSY5yok...

    Peer Feedback:

    James, you're the best! No asthma, but I am thinking my UHaull covers I'm using to deaden the sound might be making my throat a little tight. Plus it was definitely late at night and I was tired when recording. Actually just finished a 3 hr webinar session on Edge and was playing around with that piece. I'm not a golfer and you are right it does come off condescending if you're a golfer.

    I did follow your advice and looked Barbara up. I can hear what you mean and why she is at the top of her game. Obviously a gifted performer all around too. I bought her book on performing for audio books. Glad to know she doesn't mess with DAWs! She saves her energy and time on her performance. Great tips on page turns! Will definitely check out the webinar on Audacity! You sir are a wealth of information. Your candid, thorough, and humorous feedback is always greatly appreciated!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Shucks, M'am. Yer makin' me blush!

    Peer Feedback:

    I second Larry Hudson's course. I just finished his last course a few weeks ago, myself.

    I think these guys got it pretty well handled, but I did want to say, it's pronounced BOH-GHEE not BOO-GHEE.

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL! In the words of Yoda..Golfer I am Not..

    Peer Feedback:

    lol that's a good life choice ;)

    Peer Feedback:

    Bogey = One Stroke Over Par
    on any given hole.

    Peer Feedback:

    Adding to what James was saying about reading from a tablet. I MUCH prefer the tablet and a PDF document. With a PDF, I can simply scroll down and down and never have to pause as the pages simply follow the next as you scroll down. I had to read from the Kindle app and HATE reading from the Kindle app I find...they try to make it book-like in experience...so there's virtual page turns. Also, from a PDF, I can copy/paste into my word processor if there's a lot of corrections to make.

    Peer Feedback:

    Unfortunately, I don't own a tablet. Maybe Santa will bring me one. I agree as PDF would be the way to go. Do you put it on a stand or hold it? My mic is on a floor stand with a half shell on the back. So it's like I have to do calisthenics to see the script while turning my mouth towards the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've got a scissor mic "stand" mounted in the corner of my booth, so I'm able to mount my tablet on a mic stand right in front of me. There's also some tablet holders which could mount on the stand below the mic itself...but might introduce some noise during the session while touching the tablet. I would recommend keeping them separate.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good tip! Thank you!

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    Growing Orchids

    Script:

    What to keep in mind about growing orchids.

    While each type of orchid has its own care requirements, the following five factors affect all blooms:

    Light: The plant’s tender leaves can be burned by too much direct sunlight, Yet, insufficient light stunts the growth of certain varieties.

    Temperature: Orchids that require cooler temperatures can often be well-placed in a low spot near the floor; plants needing warmer environment might do better up on shelves. In general, avoid putting orchids in drafty shelves.

    Humidity: Orchids love moisture and thrive with frequent misting.
    Fertilizer: While healthy orchids require plenty of nutrients, too much plant food can cause blackened leaf-tips.

    Water: It’s usually best to water in the morning so moisture has time to evaporate from the plant throughout the day.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/growing orchids.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is very pleasant to listen to for this educational type read. Maybe just a little slower read so that the listener can gather the information a little more easily. Liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Since Dave Crosier got me in a techno mode, I'll comment on your technical as well...

    First off, you're popping your Ps.

    There's quite a bit of low-frequency energy below 50 Hz. Your voice doesn't go down that low, so it's most likely mud (that's a technical term) from the room. Both this and the P-pops can be reduced with a sharp rolloff filter starting somewhere in the, oh, 75 to 100 range. If your microphone or preamp has a low cut (or "High Pass") filter, you probably want to be turning it on.

    The noise floor is kind of high. There is some mouth noise and some other funny clicks (edit points?) in the "silent" section, but the noise floor appears to be about -40dB (at best).

    "throughout the day" - sounds like it was recorded in a different take and edited in. It doesn't really match the rest of the read.

    Try adding a little ( a couple of dB) EQ boost at around 200 Hz - it really sounds great on your voice to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    E' Field -

    I don't read others comments so hope my ramblings are fresh thoughts for you...

    I now know more about Orchids than I ever wanted to...thank you! Seriously, a quality narration voice -- pleasant, warm, believable and edifying...

    There was some Poppin' of the Ps which is cured with an ever so slight turn of the head as you pronounce hard Ps, Ts and so Ss...matched with a Pop Filter that should cure the matter. There was also a technical 'thing' going on in the background that sounded like an audio clipping...irritating given your high quality voice

    I enjoyed hearing your read -- Nice Job!!

    Bill

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    Guitar Tip With Music

    Script:

    And now for the Guitar Tip Of The Week:
    Take care of your hands. You can finger notes more easily if you keep the nails on your fret hand trimmed short. Leave the nails on your picking hand slightly longer to facilitate plucking the strings. Rough edges on your nails will impair the tone of your playing, so be sure to use a good set of clippers and an emery board to maintain smooth nail tips. Wash your hands prior to playing. Clean hands transmit less dirt and help maintain string life and tone.

    28 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Moe Biscuits's recording

    Already uploaded this one, but added music to it this time. Wondering how the mix sounds to everyone else.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-59923/script-recording-63445.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The music is nice, and you have a great voice, but I don't get the sense that you're really engaged in what you're saying. I think you might want to aim for a friendlier delivery. And in the last sentence, "clean" should be emphasized. Almost there. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read, music could be a little lower, but otherwise sounded pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds straight from a info video

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    Hope Now

    Script:

    The land of Rwanda, Land of 1000 hills, lush, prosperous, a beautiful God created land... A land with a rich history and a story that brings laughter, tears, and hope. In 1994, Rwanda survived a genocide that changed the course of the whole country. A genocide that killed nearly 1 million Rwandans in just 100 days- 20% of the countries population. This civil war, tore a nation, devastated lives and communities. This was a time for tears...

    32 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jennthurston's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-18530/script-recording-39746.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jenn,

    Your voice is absolutely beautiful! The delivery was clear, nice pace, pitch, good amount of emotion and totally relatable. You definitely could succeed within the Voice Over industry.
    Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very very nice voice. I'll say that first off. I'm not so certain that your tone really matches a documentary style though. I can hear you doing so many things such as advertising, audio books and probably documentaries, but in this instance, you sound as if you're selling Johnson & Johnson baby shampoo instead of emphasizing a very tragic story. You do have a fairly somber tone, but to me, not serious enough for the words. It's just my humble opinion. Don't get me wrong: I believe you definitely have the tools for VO.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good copy interpretation! I felt the "emotion" behind the copy.
    Your vocal performance was excellent! Very clear, filled with a mix of sorrow and history.
    Recording quality was very good. Very clear!

    In my opinion, you have an excellent voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think Brian had some very valid points. This was a tragedy, a genocide, an cleansing of a million people. The tone to me felt as though you were selling a travel package not telling the story of horror and bloodshed of women, children who couldn`t escape do to poverty or entrapment. How would you have told the story if you were there just after this happened and walked around the affected areas? It just sounded too happy to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    BrianPoole is right on. It's a tragic subject and the tone needs to reflect it. Aside from that, you have a gorgeous voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Insert a little more sadness to your commentary.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jennifer,
    Great voice!! I thought the read could have been just a bit slower...and even more emotive. Try this one again...you have the potential to kill this one.

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    How To Accessorize A Bedroom

    Script:

    The decorating scheme in a bedroom shouldn't bore you to sleep every night. Choose accessories that are attractive as well as functional, but avoid clutter. A decorative box is a great hiding place for a remote control, eyeglasses, tissues and other typical bedside paraphernalia. Place a telephone and a flashlight within reach of the bed. These items can be life savers during an emergency.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear the edits? How is the performance?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4472/script-recording-28337.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina,
    Very nice voice! Smooth delivery, compliments the script very well. One little adjustment, try to end your sentence with a little more energy, it sounds as though your level drops the last couple of words; in doing so it can only be a plus to an already good read. With that said this was very well done. I am sure that you would also do a great job with instructional audios and videos.

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't hear a sonic difference at edits, but I can tell you edited because your space between the first and second sentence is unnaturally quick. And since you didn't say you edited the script, I'll point these out: "hiding place for (a) remote control, eyeglasses, tissue(s) and" with the letters in parenthesis being omitted from your read. And there was accent in "eyeglasses."

    Vocally very pleasing. Pace was good overall, but like mentioned, the pauses edited down were too quick to me. Good overall read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina, I liked your recording. I thought you read the copy as it should and couldn't tell if there were any edits. I'm using earbuds though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you JavierSvoice, TxTom, and amichaelgray I really appreciate the feedback. I will try instructional reads. It is very encouraging to hear good things about my voice. Thank you all.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi sabrina,
    I might suggest rehearsing the script until you know it backwards and forwards. It's only a paragraph. By recording each sentence and splicing them together you run the risk of throwing the read off and losing the flow. The problem is not so much in how close to edit the next word but the force you use in starting each sentence. Rather than getting a nice even flow to your delivery it comes in small waves at the beginning of each sentence. Get to know the script, be comfortable with it. Too many rush to record before preparing for the read. Don't get discouraged, be tenacious, make it work.

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    How To Guide: Creating Hand Written Notes With Apple Pencil

    Script:

    Creating notes with your Apple Pencil is as easy as a tap. Here are some helpful tips to use in your next note. To quickly create a new note tap the lock screen of your iPad with your Apple Pencil and then you can start writing. Whatever you write or draw from here will automatically be saved in notes.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kenneths's recording

    Working on some of the final scripts for my narration demo. This one is an explainer meant to be read over imagery related to the copy. Love any thoughts on interpretation and performance. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-151887/script-recording-106623.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    All in all it was very good. You've done this before I can tell. I would work on maintaing the energy towards the end og the sentences. One example would be "...easy a tap",
    "... you can start writing.", "...will automatically be saved in notes."

    Interpretation was spot on as well your timing. Recording quality was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great youthful, upbeat delivery. Maybe one two many falling inflections at the end of the sentence, especially "in Notes." Notes is another app, of course, and you might give the word a little lift as if to say, "Isn't that cool?! It automatically saves your work in Notes!" Otherwise, I again like the different type of voice you demo with this script. Great fit. Bill A.

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    Incline Village - Virtual Tour/E Learning

    Script:

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear chrissy45's recording

    Appreciate any comments as I am fairly new to VO biz. Working on getting a better set up as far as recording space goes as well as figuring out the Audacity program. It's all very exciting and I love it. Currently have a Snowbal mic but thinking of getting a VO 1-A or B1 Condenser mic. Any thoughts are welcome on that score as well. Cheers - Christine

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-31488/script-recording-48269.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    where do I sign up....you sold me....good job

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy45 --
    welcome to the forum!
    I like the accent. recording quality was pretty good for a beginner with a Snowball . If you ask for opinions on microphones on this forum, you'll get lots of them! I personally like Blue Microphones (of which your snowball is a junior member).

    Regarding your read: nice voice, and a great start. I thought your activity list seemed a bit flat, though. need more modulation there. Besides, look at how awesome each choice on the list is! well, except for Event Facilities....

    BTW, "Frequently Asked Questions" is a single thing...(a noun? aka "FAQ")

    I think a scenic Lake Tahoe resort recording should really really exciting, etc. I think you could put a little more juice in this message.

    hopefully helpful,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy.

    I think you did a good job here. With elearnng scripts its important to let the user adsorb the content with you as you tell the instructions or message of the elearning program. I felt it all blended together and if I was clicking along may have trouble searching the screen looking for the buttons and may miss the next section or instruction. keep that in mind as you address your listener. Over all the tone was nice, and there was an awkward pause in "frequently asked questions". The end "lets get started" seemed to me that you wanted this to end rather than get going. Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you to all you sent comments to me. It really does help and this is a one of the great things about the Edgedtudio site. I will be doing a lot more practice pieces and look forward to receiving comments, help, advice etc. Cheers to all Chrissy45

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    Incline Villiage

    Script:

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

    Script from Edge Studio's 4,869 Practice Script Library >
    English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Want to see if I finally got my setup working properly and shaking off some dust from a brief break.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Virtual Tour Incline Villiage.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    From the top - "Hello" sounded more surprised (like saying it to a person you hadn't expected) than a warm, inviting greeting. The difference between "HELLo" and "h'lLO". Just my impression.

    One thing that will help you vocally set off "Enter" is to actually physically make "air quotes" with your fingers. It automatically makes you set off and emphasize the word. Same thing with ("fax"). (And to the writer - Why use parenthesis and quotes? Kinda redundant, ain't it?)

    The ending had a lot of character. Nice touch to get someone excited to be cruising the information on what I assume is an information kiosk.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great recording in terms of quality. Sounds like you're talking to someone not reading.
    In a few places, the pacing is uneven and certain words aren't articulated fully or clearly i.e. 'virtual' and 'frequently'. This takes away from an otherwise good and engaging read.

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    Instantaneous Displacements

    Script:

    As you can see in Figure 3-1, a bar is fixed at one and is set into vibration by tapping it from the bottom. Imagine that a strobe light is used to take a series of snapshots of the bar as it vibrates up and down.

    At each snapshot the instantaneous displacement of the bar is measured. Instantaneous displacement is the distance between the rest position of the bar (defined as zero displacement) and its position at any particular instant in time.

    Positive numbers signify displacements that are above the rest position, while negative numbers signify displacements that are below the rest position. The vibratory pattern that is traced out when the sequence of displacements is graphed is called a sinusoid.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear stevengonzalesvo's recording

    Brutal Critique is welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-54626/script-recording-77565.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steven,

    First off, I want to say that you have a nice, friendly voice! I noticed right off the bat that you were over enunciating the words, and it sounded very repetitious.

    I hope that this helps, have a Wonderful Day!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Tone and sound quality is nice. As Carol had mentioned the "t's" were hit too hard in most areas. When you relaxed on the T's some mouth noise started to come in (more of a saliva sound). To me it sounds as though English is a second language in which you are trying to overcompensate to pronounce "correctly" in every word you are saying. That's great, and once you relax and start to back off a bit you will smoothen out the rhythm and flow of the reads. I had a listen to the demos on your website. Same type of problem.

    Dialect coaches should be able to assist with that as well. Again the sound and tone is very nice.

    -dk-

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Carol and Daniel.

    Thanks for the feedback. Your comments about my over-enunciating are in line with what my practice groups and coaches have had to say. I'll be providing another take soon with corrections.

    Thanks again!
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Like they say, once is an anomaly, twice is possibly coincidence, but three times is a trend.

    I have to concur with Carol and Daniel to a degree. There is a tendency to over-articulate or over-compensate for what Daniel perceived as a slightly Hispanic (judging from your last name) accent. That tendency has you concentrating on "correctness" rather than content. As a result, parts of the read seems a little disconnected which may cause the listener to concentrate on the delivery instead of the information that's being imparted. It's subtle. Take the second sentence for example. You're asking for the listener to "imagine", to get a picture in their mind of what you're describing. So, maybe slowing the pace or use a little more casual inflection, breaking down the component parts of the sentence - or actually physically doing something as you speak; like popping your hands open and shut like a strobe, actually taking that picture with an imaginary camera and waggling a finger up and down in a sine wave motion. Those physical movements will come out through your voice. It'll give you that "connection" to the material. If you were a professor standing up in front of a class, that's probably what you'd do (physically) to emphasize the point you're making.

    I also went to your website (BTW - nice site and great logo) and listened to your demos. A couple of questions: Is it an Edge product? (I'm thinking not, but I also don't think that they were self-produced. However, some of the scripts were recognizable as Edge Library scripts. The sound quality is very good though.) My suggestion would be to come up with a few more original pieces of copy. Did you have someone directing/coaching you?

    Also, the long A's (especially in the Narration demo) are a little odd sounding. "Uh" would be more "natural" sounding (in most cases) as the way one would say it in "conversation." And, as Daniel touched on, the "formalness" or "correctness" of the pronunciation gets in the way of your actual "connection" to the thoughts and to the listener.

    One thought on the perceived accent. I noticed that you list yourself as Middle Age / Senior as a voice type. Quite honestly, until I saw that (and your picture on LinkedIn), I wouldn't have thought that just by listening to your voice - you sound, maybe not quite millennial, but younger than an old fogey like me. With the understanding that it is difficult (but not impossible) for us old dogs to learn new tricks (in your case, a slight accent correction), you might flip that around and use it to your advantage. With all of the talk of the Neutral American sound for VO, there actually are people out there that talk the way you do and can relate to the way you naturally sound. This culture is becoming more "eclectic" in the types of people we are (and how we sound/speak). For instance, there is a trend for that "urban" sound for quite a few things now. Trends change and it may swing in another direction. So, I would encourage you to investigate what Daniel suggests (a dialect coach), but (even though it may be somewhat limiting in the VO market) also be who you are. Take Arron Rodger's advice: R-E-L-A-X. Could be that you're just trying to hard. Who knows, you may start the next trend.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, James.
    I don't like to speak about myself; however, in this case it may be helpful. I really am much more from the French than from Hispanic. Only one thread of the four (maternal/paternal,etc) is Hispanic. But it gave me my surname.

    People from south Louisiana tend to cut corners when speaking. Slurries are a way of life :-). Maybe I'm trying too hard to overcome that issue.

    Thanks for the kind words about my website. I designed the logo myself (took all of about 15 minutes since I knew what I wanted) and designed/programmed the site. After Apple stopped supporting Flash, I redesigned it with smart devices in mind.

    My demos are not self-produced and was not produced by Edge. They are cited as non-competitive by at least three people (what did you say about trends? :-) ).

    Love the Aaron Rodgers reference.

    Thanks for your advice which, as always, is gold.
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Kind of knew the accent was something other than Hispanic (N.O. Cajun?), but it shows you how our perception can be somewhat tainted by the suggestion of a name. However, that local colloquial-ness may do you well for the local market. As the politicians say, you'd be appealing to your base. So, I'd say, embrace it (for that market).

    You must be a Saints fan then. Can't think of a Drew Brees quote that fits the sentiment.

    Listen to demos on VoiceBank.net. IMHO, some of your spots (especially on the commercial demo) are too long (and that particular demo is, in itself, about 15 - 20 seconds too long in total). Think snippets rather than full spots - sometimes all need is a one-line tag.

    Looking forward to chatting with you about Reaper.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steven,

    When I first started out on here, I over enunciated everything and it was a very bad habit. James and all of the other kind folks on here kindly reminded me of this and I finally broke the habit. Just like everyone is saying, Relax, and things will flow smoothly. I grew up in New York and have an accent, now I can switch over to a neutral one when I need too. It takes practice and patience, that will get you far in this business.

    Keep recording these scripts and listen to the critiques, they really helped me and have made me into the Voice talent that I am today!! I am very Thankful for all of the kindness that I have gotten on here : )

    So keep on Voicing!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Carol.

    And now you're one of the "kind folks"! :-) It is appreciated.

    Peer Feedback:

    If your looking for all "kind" reviews don't ask for "Brutal Critiques" ... :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Daniel,

    I _am_ asking for Brutal Critiques. Kind critiques are great: they show me what to keep. Brutal Critiques, like losing at chess, show me where improvement is needed. They are just as welcome.

    Humbly,
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Main reason I've backed off commenting is that most seem to be seeking kind critiques. I'm not a fluffy bunny listening to unicorn farts. (vague reference...if you get it, you're watching a really bad show)

    Peer Feedback:

    lol +1 for Tom!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Tom.

    lol! Bring it on, my friend, bring it on!

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    Instructional/How-to Video

    Script:

    EXOSTENCIL is an exciting new product that simplifies the process of creating a silkscreen by eliminating the need for a film positive, photopolymer emulsion, UV exposure or drying time.

    This significantly reduces the time involved in creating a silkscreen from many steps (and hours) to just two steps and 5 minutes.

    This new dry stencil film also addresses the industry needs for safer and environmentally safer products by eliminating BPA and other additives from the whole process.

    Because EXOSTENCIL eliminates the need for extra products, equipment and time, this allows you to increase your profit margins by allowing your business to produce quality products cheaper and faster.

    To get started, print out art
    Place a transfer sheet over the art
    Peel back one corner for easy removal later.
    Place on heat press and cover with parchment paper.
    Heat at 210 degrees fahrenheit for 25 seconds using heavy pressure.
    When done, peel off the back sheet while the transfer is still hot

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    It's for a "how-to" video, so mainly just want it to be informative but also upbeat and engaging.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94887.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording was clean. Pacing was consistent. May have been a little slow. I think the performance got better as you got deeper into the copy.

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    Introduction to HDInsight

    Script:

    Windows Azure HDInsight makes Apache Hadoop and the MapReduce software framework available in a simpler, more scalable, and cost efficient Windows Azure environment. I can quickly provision an HDInsight cluster in Windows Azure and run a MapReduce job. By using HDInsight, I pay only for the compute capacity and the storage that I use. When I'm done, I can simply delete the cluster without paying any further charges.

    32 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Gary Ericson's recording

    What I'm really looking for is EQ feedback (though you're welcome to comment on the performance). I'm recording in a homemade vocal booth (like a Porta-Booth) - it reduces room echo but it sounds muffled to me. I've got 2 takes here: first, with no EQ; second, dipping 100 Hz and below (-4dB) and boosting around 5kHz (+6dB), trying to brighten it up a bit. Does it help or make it worse? Do I just need a better mic? Using an AKG Perception 100 mic and Scarlet 2i2 on a PC with Audacity.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5183/script-recording-66511.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely take 2. Brighter, crisper, brings your voice out up front!

    David Michaelson

    Peer Feedback:

    It does sound a bit boxy, but there's really not much below 100 Hz in your untreated recording, so cutting there really isn't doing anything. 6dB boost @5KHz is too much.

    Here's what sounds pretty good to me. I didn't spend a lot of time tweaking, so use this as a starting point:

    -2.0dB low shelf starting around 300Hz
    +2.3dB around 800 Hz, bandwidth 1.5 octave
    +2.6dB around 4.5KHz, bandwidth 0.8 octave

    I', listening on AKG K240 headphones, Equator D5 speakers, and cheapo computer monitor speakers. Can't hear much difference on the cheapo speakers, but on the others it sounds more natural to me. A bit of de-essing (I'm using a free plugin called spitfish) seems to help as well...

    I have one of these mics and never liked the sound of it on vocals (mine) until I tried it through a Focusrite ISA One preamp. I think maybe it's the transformer input on that preamp that tames the high end of this mic, but I'm not sure... Oh, and of course that preamp costs like 5 times as much as the mic (yikes!)

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the un-EQ'd sound was better and much more natural. The second read had a definite lack of natural timbre. I don't think either read has evidence of room noise and neither sounds "muffled" as you state, but that might result from you being familiar with the room you're reading in and being aware of what you're hearing through your system. The first clip isn't a bad sound.

    My question would be: Are you seeking to "brighten" the sound? Is that based on your perception that you think it sounds muffled? Are you trying to over-come the perceived "muffled" sound? To that end, I would like to hear the recording without your "porta-studio" style set-up.

    I guess I'd have to say that the first recording sounded more natural than the second and for some reason, listening to the second after the first, I felt like someone had suddenly turned off some of the EQ bands. It sounded/felt like someone had quickly shoved a band or two down.

    Oh, and on the mic...I had a Perception 220 before I went on to purchase an AKG C414 XLS. I have to say, that in my experience, AKG tends to be a little shrill or brittle on the top end. Their mics are great for acoustic instruments...but IMO, not so much for vocals. I traded both AKGs in toward a Neumann and have been MUCH happier with the sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    Gary,

    A couple of questions; how close are you to the mic? what is your recording level set at on the knob of the scarlett?

    One trick might be backing up to about 8 inches from the mic, elevate it slightly above your mouth, pointed down, and slightly off axis to one side. This may alleviate some of the 'proximity' effect i'm hearing with the recording. It gives the mic a little room to breath.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, everyone, for your comments. This is terrific.

    Sundance: Thanks for the specific EQ numbers (and the spitfish idea). I'll try these on my next project this weekend. I wish I knew an absolute EQ 'standard' I could conform to, but I guess I just need to get my ears trained. I should find an example of a professional with a similar timbre as mine, whose sound I really like, and then try to emulate that.

    TxTom: I'm just concerned about a "muffled" sound. I don't necessarily want it brighter, per se, I just want to make sure that it doesn't sound like I'm talking in a box (I am, I just don't want it to sound like it :-). The different opinions here make me think that it may be a preference thing, though it sounds like the consensus is that the rough EQ tweaking I did makes it generally sound more unnatural.

    zm15: The Scarlett mic volume is set at about 3:00 (don't know what the label says). I'm 6-8 inches from the mic. My 'booth' is a large plastic bin, turned on its side, standing lengthwise, and lined with acoustic foam. The mic is near the top center, angled, pointing down toward me; my mouth is 6-8" away not directed straight at the mic. This stops room echo nicely, but I'd like to make a larger enclosure, like a real stand-up booth - even though it's lined with good foam, the plastic bin may be resonating bass more than I thought, so a larger enclosure might help with that and I can maybe get even further from the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your "Harlan Box" sounds exactly like my original sound treatment. AND you're using an AKG Perception. VERY similar to what I was using. If your "bin" is closed in the back, it MIGHT resonate a little. I used a fold-able file box for my "bin"...it let sound out the side because they weren't solid. Be careful not to speak right into the box. I had a paper holder attached to the side to hold my script and to ensure that I was about 45º off axis. I read toward the script and was about 8 inches away from the mic. I didn't have resonation issues at all. MY biggest issue is that the room still comes into play because all the box/bin/portabooth does is take care of what's behind the mic and to the sides. If your room is less that silent (ambient noise) it will still get that. I live on a corner lot...lots of cars flying by. Always had to read between passing cars. The frustration often reflected in my reads. LOL

    As long as nothing comes between you and your mic, other than a pop screen, you'll not really muffle the sound. What you MIGHT be perceiving is a dulling of the room effects. Less lively a sound perhaps. The walls might be taken out of what you're hearing. That's usually a good thing.

    Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Checking in from the road...

    I have to disagree with what Tom said. The absorption the box provides is in the area where the mic is least sensitive, so its purpose is not to absorb reflections coming back toward the rear of the mic. Its purpose is to absorb/block as much of your voice as possible so it doesn't get past the box and bounce around the room. You should be talking directly into the box. Now, that said, it has very little efect on the low frequencies - it takes a lot of foam or fiberglass or whatever to absorb bass frequencies, so they are going to pass right through. If the room dimensions are such that you get bass buildup, the box won't help that. But you can try moving it around the room a bit and that may change the effect somewhat. A corner of the room would be thye worst possible spot for it, for example. You probably don't want to be smack dab in the center either...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom and Sundance -- I like the closed box because it reduces room echo; I don't need to block sound because the room is quiet (just a subtle PC fan, which I can deal with). I'm hoping this weekend to build a cheap 3'x3'x7' "booth", padded inside with moving blankets and acoustic foam. The goal is to eliminate room echo, but in a larger space so I can try moving back from the mic a little, and to give me a place to set up my mic and leave it (I currently have to remove the box from my desk after each recording, so my sound tends to be inconsistent from one session to the next). I just need to decide whether to build a PVC frame with blankets hanging from it, or nail together a plywood box - I'm not all that handy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Where Sundance and I are going to differ is whether to have the mic right in front of you or to have it off-axis. I prefer off-axis to reduce shrill esses. That would mean NOT speaking directly into the box. But...it's just advice, eh?

    Good luck with setting up a space. As long as your neighborhood and house are relatively quiet, you'd probably be happier with a PVC frame and moving blankets. Once you close in a plywood box, you start having to worry about boxy-ness. That pursuit can start to run up some $s.

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't say you have to have the mic right in front of you. It can be off-axis while you are speaking directly into the box. The mic does not have to be square to the box - you can rotate it a bit, move it off-center. Or, if you want to rotate your head to get it off-axis, rotate the box with it. The net effect is the same...

    Peer Feedback:

    Just to close the loop -- I ended up building a 36"x40"x7.5' frame out of 3/4" PVC pipe (didn't bother gluing the joints), then hung 3 inexpensive 36"x80" moving blankets all the way around, fastened at the top with safety pins. I covered the top with a large sheet of cardboard on which I glued acoustic foam (I could have used more blanket, but I had the foam laying around). Hung a light inside (with a CFL bulb so it doesn't get hot), set up the mic overhead and angled down towards my mouth (I talk past it instead of straight on), and added a music stand covered with a cloth. I've been standing to read, but I have a tall stool I could use if I want to sit. It feels roomy in there.

    It's not soundproof, which I didn't need because the room is quiet, but it does provide a very dead feel. It's a large enough space that I don't think I'm getting a boxy sound or bass emphasis like I felt I was getting with the port-booth setup.

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    Introduction to OSHA Federal Requirements

    Script:

    Introduction

    This chapter provides technical information about fall hazards and protection methods.
    The information is intended to help prepare OSHA compliance officers to conduct
    inspections and investigations. For convenience, links are provided to applicable OSHA
    standards throughout this chapter. This chapter does not cover all OSHA requirements for
    fall prevention/protection methods, and is not intended to serve as a comprehensive guide
    for developing compliant fall protection programs.

    Although fall hazards are common at construction worksites, fall-related injuries and
    fatalities are preventable. Fall hazards can be addressed in two main ways:

    Fall prevention: preventing workers from falling by using engineering controls (e.g.,
    guardrails and hole covers) or restraint systems.

    Fall arrest/rescue: preventing injury during and after a fall by using personal fall
    arrest systems (PFAS) or safety nets and having an effective rescue plan in place.

    Recognizing fall hazards and planning to control them before work begins is critical for
    determining the best methods and equipment for protecting workers during construction
    activities at heights.

    Emergency response planning will identify necessary emergency response training and
    critical resources (e.g., trained on-site fall arrest rescue team and rescue equipment).

    A number of OSHA standards contain provisions for protecting workers from falls. In the
    construction industry, applicable standards include:

    - 29 CFR 1926.500–.503: Fall Protection;
    - 29 CFR 1926.760: Steel Erection;
    - 29 CFR 1926.954: Electric Power Transmission and Distribution; and
    - 29 CFR 1926.1423: Cranes and Derricks.

    Refer to Appendix B for a more complete list of OSHA standards on fall protection.

    OSHA-approved state occupational safety and health plans may have different standards,
    but those standards must be at least as effective as federal OSHA requirements. More
    information about state plans is available on the OSHA website.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear montereichert's recording

    I'm new to VO and I am investigating what gene will work best for me. I have a BS degree in engineering and have spent over 30 years working in aerospace so my technical back ground is substantial. As such, I believe e-learning and corporate training may work best for me. I plan on working in the VO field part time for now and I hope to expand that to full time as a new career! PS: I am also excited about the possibility of VO in commercials if that manifests itself.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-110573/script-recording-94570.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you are perfectly suited for this type of copy. It is very difficult to read consistently but you did well. There was only 1 minor pause but it did not take away from the reading 8

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm hearing a regionalism in the delivery, but that's a minor concern compared to the rushed and over-articulated fashion in which the script was read. Slow it down...there's not likely a time limit...and relax the diction. Read the script as if you were talking to your best friend and not a microphone. The specific sections to look up ( the CFR stuff) might need some direction. It's slowed by the need to read each and every character which might be better delivered with some "knowledgeable shortcuts" that someone in the industry or in the production department might be able to provide. Not knowing where you got the copy, I can't answer that. If it was copy/pasted from a written manual, it might be modified for audio. Nice start.

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    Kindergarten: Nasal Sounds

    Script:

    Today we will do a new experiment with sounds.
    • Put your hand in front of your nose and say /m/. Can you feel the air coming out your nose?
    • Now try to say /m/ with your nose plugged. Can you do it?
    • /m/ is called a nasal sound. Nasal is the word for nose.
    • If I had a nasal spray, what part of my body would it be for?
    • If I have nasal surgery, where did I have surgery?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Joyful Voice's recording

    Does the energy level feel age-appropriate for kindergarten without tormenting the parents?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-127979/script-recording-101338.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal Performance: I think you're on the right track. You could probably take the energy up even a little bit more. I felt like you had a little bit more when you said, "Nasal is the word for nose!" So, you won't torment the parents with just a bit more energy.

    Good pacing. You were also clear in your pronunciations.

    Recording quality: Sounded pretty good!

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    55 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lenny2010's recording

    General feedback: Tone, pacing, general feel. They wanted an inspirational feel to the piece but not overboard.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1620/script-recording-108850.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I LOVE your tone. I think you used the word passionate and I felt that throughout the entirety of your recording. Great work!

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    Law Enforcement Educational Video

    Script:

    Managing a traditional paper-based FTO Program with Daily Observation Reports is cumbersome and often leads to:

    • Incomplete or missing documentation
    • Mangled forms and
    • Hurried entries with varying grade criteria and accountability standards

    All of this makes it difficult to pinpoint exactly when and where recruits go off track and whether the problem lies with the recruit or whether it is systemic.

    Fortunately, a better solution is available.

    The Law Enforcement Automated Personnel System – or LEAPS for short – is a paperless, web-based personnel management and training solution.

    100 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Target audience is law enforcement personnel, so delivery needs to be authoritative but still friendly.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-96351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice job Ken.Inflections are good and sentences are well spaced.Great inflections also. Well done

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    MacIntosh Switch

    Script:

    More people are interested in switching from PCs to Macs than ever before. Now, you’ll see why they made the switch, and just how easy it was! You’ll discover how compatible Macs are with PCs, learn all the great ways a Mac can give you a better digital life, and understand how Macs can make your life easier and your possibilities endless.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DV1's recording

    Hi There. Hope this finds you very well. I'm setting up my practice gear using Twisted Wave and a Rhode Podcaster Microphone. Would like to start submitting for the weekly script contest and need to gage sound levels - can you hear me - is it clear? Any suggestions are appreciated. Thank you for your time! Cheers, Darla

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7539/script-recording-59508.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You need to get the volume level up. Mostly your recording is around -24dB - if you read the various comments down below regarding levels, you'll see that around -3dB is the preferred level... What is coming through sounds pretty good, btw.

    But normalizing your current recording produces a noise floor around -34dB - way too high. It's not clear how much of that is actual background noise (e.g. computer fan noise) vs. hiss from the preamp or whatever...

    I'm not familiar with the particular microphone you're using, but if it has a gain control you need to try turning it up. If it doesn't have a gain control (either on the device itself or in the software - Volume or Input Volume setting), then moving closer to the mic and/or talking louder may be your only options. If you're using headphones to monitor while you record, you might try turning the headphone level down - this will encourage you to talk louder so that you can hear yourself at the same level in the headphones...

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, your peak amplitude (level) is at -23db. You'll want to normalize that up to -3db.

    Peer Feedback:

    Darla --
    aside from your recording being very quiet as noted above, I thought your performance was great!
    very nice voice - sounds like it's right in the wheelhouse of female commercial voices.

    Your read might have room for a little tweaking; it sounded a little tentative.
    I think you could hit "easy" and "easier" harder, because that's the key of this read. that switch to a Mac is EASY!

    same with "great way" and "better digital life".

    overall, nice performance.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I am just getting over a cold and feel as if my voice is sounding all right but feedback on this would be good.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Mackintosh-switch.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,

    You sound conversational, good job! Just be careful of your voice going up and down, like a roller coaster. I have been struggling with sounding like a broadcaster/announcer, and also choppiness. Well, practices makes perfect!!

    Hope that you are feeling better!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I guess we all have our struggles and I've found that the roller-coaster thing is quite prevalent in my family. It's in all of our conversations and it's a struggle for me to tame it. Yes, I am feeling better. Also, I think you're doing quite well in your focus on not sounding like a radio announcer.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    This is a potential section of an e-learning/educational demo about chronic pain. (I would prefer no music, but let me know if a MB would be preferable). Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-84083.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read is nice and up - almost too much so. Every one of your sentences (or sentence fragments) have virtually the came arc of inflection to them. It's far from sing-songy, but there is a definite pattern to the delivery.

    For instance, take the last sentence. It's kind of a dire warning - or at least a warning - to the lasting (cost) effectiveness of the health care system. So, it needs a certain weight or gravitas placed on it. This was a little too "flippant" or glib sounding in conjunction to the rest of the narrative, which sounded the same (inflection wise). (That's a little over-stating it, I guess.)

    I would suggest to slow it down just a titch (a technical term). The numbers are important, so they need a little stress and more clarity. Example: "...between 40 and 70 million..." got a little rushed and smushed (another technical term) into "...between fordyansevendy million..." Nothing wrong with rounding off the T's, but a little separation between the two major numbers would bring the point home.

    There is some "live-ness" to the recording. Can't tell or decide whether it's due to your recording environment or applied noise reduction. Obvious that you either edited out the breaths or used a de-breather (or noise gate) to eliminate their sounds. In either case, the de-breather didn't catch all of the breath's associated sounds - there are some remnants, sometimes before and sometimes after a breath. Other times, bits of words are clipped at the front or off the back. Both of these are very, very slight but noticeable to my aged ears. The result is that the sentences and sentence fragments become choppy - not a fault of the delivery, but the editing or processing.

    Peer Feedback:

    As James said: there's certainly a liveliness to the sound. It's not from a reverb, it's room. And I also agree that your tone is a bit too "up" for the material. No need to go sour (or dour) in tone, but perhaps less peppy and a little more 'factual' ...conveying important information that's not a sales type pitch.

    Definitely slow it down. James mentions a pattern in the sentences...it's less than 30s, so whether that would continue in a longer read(?)...it would be problematic then. Sometimes people hit a stride after the first few sentences that breaks such a pattern and becomes more conversational in nature. But it's best to not have a discernible pattern to break FROM. I'll leave the editing notes to James. He covered it and I have to get back to editing myself.

    Peer Feedback:

    Once again great and precise advice from James and Tom. This was a first take recording. I knew ahead of time I wasn't as close to the mic as I normally am. I neglected to use my background blankets and window shade that is sound proofing. This produced more room noise and "live-ness" like you mentioned. Also my editing skills have been more of a challenge lately because of a recent hand injury. After a few more times listening to my recording, I believe your comments and advice about my technique were spot on. I had a hunch it was a tad quick, etc. Always appreciate the tips you guys give and the time you put in to help others. Thanks!

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    Me

    Script:

    Me, Me, Me; All you want is me
    All I need is a little sleep
    You come in, you say "GO
    There's a lot of things to know"
    We will learn, we will play
    We will do it every way
    Feed your brains, feed your brawns
    You will be the stronger one
    Read some books, watch some shows
    You can learn from all of those
    School is good, that's where you'll go
    To learn the stuff from those who know

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear clayputt's recording

    Children's song to help kids want to read/learn, possibly for e-learning program intro. Music sample was provided (I didn't make up the tune).

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114298/script-recording-100126.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Clayput,
    This is good. I think you need a little more brightness in your tone so that it sounds happier. I hope you get it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nicely done! you have a wonderful soft and warm tone.

    The tempo is very consistent, I found myself swaying back and forth to the melody.

    I do agree with sanspeech that it needs to be a little brighter. I would work on imagining you're singing to a child directly with the goal of making him or her smile.

    well done.

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    Medical E-Learning Module

    Script:

    The triage nurse dons gloves and climbs into the pickup bed next to the patient. The nurse instructs the emergency technician to get a cervical collar, spine board, and additional help. There is active bleeding from numerous facial, chest, and abdominal lacerations (las-­eh-­ray-­shunz). The right arm is covered with a dirty towel, which is saturated with blood.
    The patient is obtunded (ahb-­tun-­dehd) responding to verbal stimulus with moans and unintelligible sounds. Manual cervical stabilization is performed while assessing the airway. Copious amounts of blood and vomitus are present in the oropharynx (oar-­oh-­fair­inks). Without readily available suction, the nurse attempts a mouth sweep with two fingers to clear the airway.

    73 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear nicholasjwolf's recording

    This is my first time asking for feedback on an audition outside of Audition Ringers. The client is looking for, "...a confident, engaging, professional and upbeat narrator for 8 medical e-­learning modules." All feedback appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99546/script-recording-94368.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nicholas!

    My first impression was that your tone was warm, I wanted to continue listening. You handled the technical terms smoothly, and were able to bring character to the script. A script like this could have easily gone flat.

    As for the recording quality it the volume was great, I am new to all of this so I don't even know if it is a thing, but I am very aware of mouth clicks, I do not know how to edit them out yet, or even reduce them in the first place. I heard them here but it was still very well done.

    Great job!

    ~Andi~

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    Medical Narration Demo Script

    Script:

    (Music)
    It is likely that loss of O-glycosylation at Thr 178… increases susceptibility of fibroblast growth factor-23… to proteolytic degeneration,… resulting in low serum levels of fibroblast growth factor-23. … …Mice that completely lack fibroblast growth factor-23 …develop severe phosphate-retention phenotypes …characterized by extensive soft tissue calcification and hyperphosphatemia.

    (Hospital ambience)
    Child: Can I play at recess?
    Yes. But if you start to feel dizzy, then you need to have somebody take you to the nurse right away. OK?
    Child: OK.

    (Techy bouncing molecules type music)
    Here, …a GABA transmitter molecule,… marked in blue,… has attached to the beta unit of the GABA receptor. … The binding twists the receptor …and opens the channel to enable chloride ions ..to enter the neuron.

    …Granulocytes…Lymphocytes…and Monocytes… There are three types of granulocytes… Neutrophils, Eosinophils, and Basophils. Each performs a specific function in the immune process.

    (music)
    Your duties may include
    • Examining patients’ teeth and gums
    • Taking and developing X-Rays
    • And teaching patients how to practice good oral hygiene on their own

    (sfx)
    OK, Let’s see how well you remember some of the information we’ve covered. Drag and drop each blood component …and each blood product… onto their corresponding group. (Some sort of sound effect that indicates that the student dragged and dropped)

    (Music with stinger at end)
    As in all previous studies comparing the relative efficacy of cimetidine and ranitidine in the inhibition of acid secretion in the Zollinger-Ellison syndrome and other gastric hypersecretory states, this study shows that ranitidine is more potent. Ranitidine was both three times more potent in the acute inhibition of basal acid secretion and in the long term.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear drmariah's recording

    Hi Randye, Based on almost 2 years trainings and demos, I have been guided toward becoming a Narration Voice Over Artist. I enjoy it very much and because I have a Doctorate in Psychology it may give me leading edge in Medical Narration. This demo you are evaluating was done after coaching in Medical Narration. It cost me a lot of money but I do like to invest a lot of myself and resources into where I place my attention. But I do not want to kid myself into thinking I have what it takes to become a successful Voice Over Artist in Medical Narration. I realize there may be more training in the future. Here are my questions: 1. How do I fare in the industry based on your experience and knowledge of what a good Medical Voice Over Artist sounds like? Do I sound too amateur? 2. Any specific issues in this demo would really need to be corrected, for example: PROBLEM WORDS: 'TRANSMITTER' 'EFFICACY' 'OH YEAH' WITH KID Should be 'YES' 3. Is there room noise on demo? Enginneer did have the sound proof pads up. I am not sure how many questions I get, but please take your time to answer all that you can. Don't hold back because of fees. I would be willing to pay you more because this is very important for me. I very much appreciate hearing comments from a very experience super pro in the industry . Thank you verrrry much! Dr. Mariah Larkin

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2574/script-recording-28421.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    to me: this was really excellent. I WOULD either take the music bed down a notch on the second sample or change it....there were some sounds from the music which actually sounded like mouth noise! Your performance was outstanding and your investment in time and training shine through. Great work.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with Tom... one of the best performances of a medical read. Your diction is spot on, the tone and pace as well as the diversity of things you did called attention to your ability to do a wide range of voice types specific to that market.

    I didn't like the way the first one was engineered. You could hear the edits, the music was competing against your voice and it seemed to strain the pace. It threw me off at first, and because it was the first sound, I imagined the rest would be like that. And Tom again points out that the music in some parts sounds like mouth noise and it's distracting. The reads are great, I'd re-engineer the first 2 or remove.

    That said, the rest of it was stellar. IMHO the best thing to do would be fix or remove clip (Part) 1 and 2. And not because of the read. Nodo420@gmail.com

    Afternote... I listened again and I couldn't hear the edits... So Tom's suggestion is the best one probably. Do bring that music down, he says a notch, I say 2, and/or change the music. My call would be changing it.

    Audition winning voice and delivery. Props to you and your coach

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    Microsoft Money

    Script:

    The Accounts and Bill Center is the hub for managing your bank and credit card accounts, paying your bills, and entering transactions. From here you can also see summaries of your favorite accounts and get reminders of upcoming bills.

    66 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rikaersh2's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-165408/script-recording-109579.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice work clear and precise I would just add more inflections and try not to hurry thru your read, thanks for sharing.

    Peer Feedback:

    good job reading the script, clear and precise. Have you ever thought of experimenting with different moods, such as happy+excited, cheery, or something as you read the commercial through?

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    Middle School

    Script:

    If you love whitewater rafting, and bungee jumping, you will love the middle school years. Starting Middle school is like entering a different planet, both for your child and for you. It’s a time when peer pressure, technology, and hormones wreak havoc in a child’s life and damage their relationship with Mom and Dad.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Joyful Voice's recording

    Thinking about this script for my demo. Be brutal. I want to know. Thank you, thank you thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-127979/script-recording-101046.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice...good sound quality too. I’m a little confused with the tie-in between rafting and bungee jumping and the middle school years though. I’m not sure the piece is long enough to fully explore the connection. I do like the “different planet” analogy, but “entering” may not be the right word (landing on, finding yourself on, etc). I’d like to see the copy reworked and your delivery be a little more expressive. Look forward to hearing more!

    Peer Feedback:

    That first sentence, as it is written, seems snarky to me, so I would like to hear more of that in your read, tapering off by the end when the words seem to call for more empathy.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Loren Phillips's recording

    working on sibilance control and the read.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-82403/script-recording-64348.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Right out the gate let me say , I enjoy the sound of your voice. It's very friendly and personable. What bothered me was how rushed you sounded. Slow down and let us soak in the sound of your voice. Try to edit out those breath sounds as well. Overall good job w/ room for improvement. Can't wait to hear more from you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Jerry for the straight feedback (I need it!) and kind encouragement. I'll work on the pace.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the conversational tone. Really nice.

    Some whistling sibilance. I'm curious how one eliminates that other than knocking down that exact range of frequencies with processing.

    Tempo seemed good to start and then you raced a little in the second-to-last sentence.

    Nits:

    "Hi there. To have the best possible experience with MiniUSA.com"

    You dip down at ".com", which would make sense if it was the end of the thought, but it's really continuing so I'd stay mid-range.

    You do the same after "plug-in", and again, I would stay mid-range.

    LOTS to like, so I needed to nit-pick. :)

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Good one, great voice, good pacing - but do edit those breaths out!

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia - thx, I did find that whistling freq at ~10.6K. Need to work on that at the source, however. I appreciate the feedback, it's very helpful.

    thx tradbrit - that's the last of my breathing to be exported!

    LP

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm trying to practice with this, and that second-to-last sentence is kind of a killer, isn't it? Hm...

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    Morton Arboretum Pt.1

    Script:

    Hello! Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VoxWerks's recording

    Just getting back to the mic after a tooth extraction, so I need the practice...feedback welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113645/script-recording-96748.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it sounded great. The pacing was good and it held my interest. The only thing I noticed was a slight popping on one of your P's and the word enter sounded like "inter."

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Buddy Bortz's recording

    Working with a new Audio Technica AT2020 USB+ mic.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95930/script-recording-91159.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, I think it was a good read. The interpretation sounded very informative. The overall quality of the recording was good, but the quality really improved towards the end of the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    The AT2020 USB mic is a very serviceable mic. And USB style mics have gotten better as far as sound quality goes in recent years. Mostly they're used for podcasts. And since they're using your internal sound card rather than a true pre amp (they include their own pre amp in in the guts of the mic), you might not be getting the full dynamic range of your voice in the recording.

    I have it's bigger brother, the AT2035 with a Scarlett 2i2 interface, which picks up a little more "body" of the voice.

    The first guide's delivery was very informative and the pacing was nice as well. Just a little over-articulated - in that it was obvious that you made a concerted effort to get those T's in on "Morton" and "Wheaton". But then why not on "Arboretum"? Because it would sound forced and unnatural. I would submit that a glottal "Mor(t)'n" and "Wea(t)'n" would sound more naturally "conversational". You also said "howduhgit" instead of 'how to get". Just some things to be aware of.

    I could be wrong (I often am), but it sounded like you either used a noise gate or de-breather. Either way, the processing missed some breaths and clipped the ends off of some words. The settings for either are a very delicate and neither are totally foolproof - you're going to have to listen carefully and adjust and/or surgically edit some things regardless.

    Take a beat or a beat and a half before going into the second narrative. It almost sounded like a continuation of the first one. If I weren't reading along, I wouldn't have known that it was a different thing, then my brain would be trying to make that connection and possibly miss the first part of the separate message.

    There was a lot of mouth noise to this one and the levels were a little erratic, especially the last two sentences. Same noise gate/de-breather problem here - clipping off the end of some of the words.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let's look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The "Introduction" tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the "Enter" button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let's continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear CEStilton's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-159997/script-recording-107918.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound is very clear and your voice is well suited for this kind of narration. Your pacing is good and your inflection interprets some tricky copy. Well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice! Your voice sounds great for this. Toward the end, on the words "white" and "right" I noticed that you hit these words by increasing you volume. Be careful with this, instead try to change up your inflection with out changing your volume. Well done and thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very sharp.
    Clear and pace was nice.
    You've done this before?

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    2 Virtual Tour/E-Learning Scripts

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChiSarah0314's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9027/script-recording-26596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the friendly and warm delivery. I hear a little "ambiance" to your recording that comes across as a hissing of the background noise in your room. One thing I've learned is along with noise reduction, you can clean your audio a little extra by silencing between the phrases. I'm wondering if you have "normalized" the audio as well, this brings a little more "presence" to your read.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Script from Edge Studio's 4,869 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Finally got my mic setup working...I think. Plus returning after a brief break.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Virtual Tour Morton.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Tricky piece of copy - lots of lists and instructions,

    After the word "Arboretum", I heard a little lip smack. No way to avoid closing your lips on an M. The trick is not to smack your lips as you take the next breath. Or you could edit out that tiny spike in the wave form.

    That first list. You did something very technically correct in giving each thing a different inflection, but it sounded a little stilted and unnatural to a "conversational" tone.

    The word "tour" belies a certain regionalism (both times). It almost sounded like "tore" instead of "2er".

    This next list is a killer. What do you do with it? You pre-asked the question where there is no question mark (after "screen"). Save the upward inflection for where the question mark is actually written. One way to handle the list is to literally physically point your finger at each item, one by one, as you say them - ending with the question.

    The next sentence (thought) was broken up by taking a breath in the middle of it. If you need a breath for that long sentence, I would suggest taking it after "highlighted".

    (pause)

    Just a fraction too long. I thought you were done.

    A little p-popping on "page" and "pane", but I think you know how to correct that.

    Nice job after your "brief break".

    Peer Feedback:

    James,

    Thank you very much!

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear deidreannjohnson's recording

    Please critique performance and sound quality. My noise floor is -46 db, even in my padded closet, door closed. I need to get this under control before I can even consider myself competitive in any way.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-40244/script-recording-108783.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, it's a decent read. I don't think the audio quality is too bad either. I would suggest:

    1) I'm hearing lots of mouth clicks on this voice over which is quite distracting. Please watch this video to prevent this in the future - https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1gjMpcinrSU. Eat grapes or water in between takes and be sure to have lots of tea.

    2) Greater consistency. For some reason, you put extra emphasis on "hover" which stands out from the rest of the reading which is mostly quieter and slower. It makes me wonder why you did that.

    3) Frequent unnecessary pauses. You speak at an unhurried pace which I like but the numerous pauses in between words make the content somewhat choppy. Say the word slowly but don't pause so much in between the words.

    4) Emotion. You seem to be speaking on a very even tone but I think it would be great if you put more emotion in your read. For instance, excitement at seeing 3600 different types of plants!

    5) Pitch. Try to experiment with changing your pitch on specific phrases to make the content sound more musical.

    Otherwise, great effort!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it. You have a comforting voice that is easy for me to listen to.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear RusellEric's recording

    This is one of your sample scripts. Recorded dry with no leveling or mastering. My first check-up with you, using an EV RE20 in a new booth.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-143038/script-recording-103002.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a pleasing voice. Your new booth sounds good! Your voice sounds just a bit tense like you may need to just relax.

    Peer Feedback:

    When I listen to my recording in this forum, it is mono in both ears of my headphones, as is the local file I have, and the waveform indicates a single channel, so I don't understand how you are hearing it in one ear. Are any others hearing this on only one side?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear WhatBobThisBob's recording

    Another raw file. No accents this time...just me. Considering the clip is raw, I'd still like to know if the general sound quality is good so I know whether I have a good baseline to start the production from. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95410/script-recording-78107.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound is a bit hollow. Ideally you would want to treat your recording space to reduce echo. You also have a good bit of mouth noise that is distracting at times.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with all the above points, and want to add that I think you're a little too energetic on this one. A calmer, more soothing delivery for a virtual tour of trees seems like it might have fit better. You will be speaking over the video, which should really be the highlight, so you need to imagine the video that the audience will be seeing, and then speak to them (through the mic) as though they were very close to you... about as close as they might be to their computer screen.

    This seems more high energy sports museum tour to me lol :)

    Not that this can't be a genre for you (which should also be about what you WANT to do) just some delivery points to consider.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. I have a foam reflection screen, but I guess there's still too much echo left in the room. I've read about a plug in called Deverb. has anyone used that before? Now...regarding the read itself. I wasn't even thinking this could have a video with it. That's really a great point, Bean. I was envisioning kind of an animated screen character (maybe done in Flash) bouncing around the web page pointing out the things as I said them. So...that brings up a basic question. In the absence of more direction/context for the read, how do you decide which way to read it? I could see it working Bean's way, my way, or several other ways depending on the final use context. How do you decide which way to go if this was an audition and all they gave you was the script?

    Peer Feedback:

    I haven't used the plug in. May work great, but I would doubt it is better than treating the room if you are able. I recently moved my stuff into a walk-in closet with clothes hanging up and 36 square feet of Auralex foam ( http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B000E1U9ZG/ref=oh_aui_detailpage_o03_s0... ) covering most of the remainder of the wall/ceiling. I couldn't believe the improvement from my much larger room, where I had the foam hanging.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that's where the genre, and dissecting the copy comes into play. It's a virtual tour, so you know there's a visual to go with it. That's a cue to lower your voice, someone's on a screen, next to their speakers, or on headphones, You don't need to bark at them. Just talk as though you were over their shoulder explaining the action that was happening. You should probably try to visualize the action as you're speaking it. You should do that with all copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're talking about one of those MudFlap thingies with the shell and the foam, consider that that only deals with reflection bouncing back into the mic from behind it, not the reflection coming in from behind you as you speak. I had one, I sold it on ebay.

    Even though you're directing your voice into the mic, sound is a bit omni-directional (especially the lower frequencies - that's why you an place a sub-woofer just about anywhere in a room, whereas the tweeters pump out a more or less directional sound and tend to be directionally focused). So whatever frequencies are bouncing off the surfaces behind you (and above and below you, ceiling and floor) are the reflections that are being picked up.

    I recently went to a Harbor Freight store and picked up some wool packing blankets. (They're really cheap. They also stink for a while.). I have constructed my own booth that is basically a room within a room. It's pretty quiet in there, but I was still getting some reflection, even with foam. I stapled those blankets to the walls and the door and put the foam on the ceiling (the floor is carpeted) and it made a huge difference - significantly cut down the reflections and dropped my noise floor another 5dB or so.

    If constructing your own booth is not a possibility, I would suggest making or getting some simple panels (like office partitions or a folding screen or PVC piping) and form a simple frame with those blankets as sound absorbing material. Then surround yourself with them when you record.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bob --
    it's WAY better to acoustically treat a home studio booth to remove noise, than try to remove it with a deverb plugin. they are tricky to set up, can introduce a bunch of distortion and artifacts into your track, and even when done correctly can't match a quiet recording space....

    there's tons of resources online and in this forum regarding creating a quiet recording space. it's not expensive.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments all. I will be focusing on figuring out a way to quiet the room down. My current space is only temporary (in our guest room) until one of the kids moves out and I can claim that room as my new official studio. So I'll probably be looking at putting together a temporary booth inside the room for now.

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    Moving Image Arts Bachelor Program

    Script:

    Cinematic storytelling is at the heart of our Moving Image Arts bachelor's program, which offers a comprehensive, hands-on, four-year curriculum that integrates film, video, and digital production with critical studies and writing. This program complements the university's expansive liberal arts core curriculum, which is predicated on a breath of knowledge that all educated artists should possess. Our goal is to educate the total filmmaker, while also providing the opportunity to focus on a
    specific discipline within the craft.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear desperta82's recording

    Trying out first recording and first submission of the feedback forum.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4705/script-recording-26954.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty good for a first shot.. You read well and have a nice voice. Lets start with the delivery. You need to practice the places you were hesitant or figure out re-phrasing. The phrase "This program complements the university's expansive liberal arts core curriculum, which is predicated on a breath of knowledge that all educated artists should possess.," is choppy and doesn't break smoothly. Also, you stumbled on "...opportunity to focus" but kept charging to the end.

    If I mess up a phrasing point, I look at it, take a deep breath and go back to the last sentence making a noise at the beginning so I know where to edit. But if you stumble of feel awkward, the listener, however much they enjoy it will focus on that. Another thing, if you have a part that is not right, go re-record that part and edit it into the final mix. It's easier than trying to fix a mistake or letting something sound strange.

    Recording quality, there's a really loud hum that you have to find and eliminate, and make sure your mouth to mic distance is good. Couldn't tell over the hum. Keep it up, you have some real potential.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, and this read is a great starting point for the Director to tune it.

    So, playing the role of the Director, I would tell you this:
    I think you need to do a little less reading, and a little more "acting" in the piece. I really felt read to...it seemed sort of flat and emotionless - as if I was hearing myself reading a syllabus, or something. No problem -- time for "take 2"

    Technical points:
    the background distortion was distracting, but can be overlooked if you're really only after feedback on performance. I think it's a combination of room noise, monaural recording (need a better mic?), and perhaps a high level of mp3 compression, which is usually the cause of that "ringing" sound. Definitely eliminate it before submitting auditions.

    I thought you misread "liberal...arts". "Liberal Arts" is a title.
    The pacing wasn't too bad -- maybe a little rushed.
    Keep an eye on ending phrases on the down-beat...that can become too repetitive and choppy.

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    Museum Tour : Hilma af Klint: Paintings for the Future

    Script:

    Welcome to Hilma af Klint: Paintings for the Future at the Solomon R. Guggenheim Museum New York.

    Born in Stockholm in 1862, Hilma af Klint began her artistic career as an academy educated painter of naturalistic landscapes and botanical illustrations. Today however she is best known for the significant body of striking original abstract paintings and works on paper that she began making just after the turn of the twentieth century. Influenced by the spiritual movements and scientific discoveries of her era, af Klint strove to express abstract concepts beyond what the eye could see. Though the artist’s work contains organic imagery and representational elements, over the course of her career these biomorphic shapes and symbols grew more simplified and geometric, more fully abstract. Sometimes combined with letters and invented words her imagery alludes straight forward interpretation and instead vibrates with complex meaning.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kenneths's recording

    This is a practice script for a guided museum tour. Working on narration genre with my Edge Studio coach. Any thoughts on interpretation and performance would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-151887/script-recording-106482.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    hi Kenneth. Nice copy read. I can see myself listening to this on a tour. I would say as a tip, try to mark places where you could make the text flow more easily and insert some beats, or, after beats, don't take too long of a pause.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice. It sounded a bit choppy, so I would try to better connect the words and phrases.

    Peer Feedback:

    Listening on my phone speaker, I truly enjoyed your performance. I like the slightly hushed quality of your voice, like you were a guide walking alongside and speaking to me. Very good. I'm not in full agreement about the cadence/pauses others pointed out. Sounded pretty connected and smooth to me overall. Thanks. Bill A.

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    Nasa Space Science: A Violent History Of Time

    Script:

    From mother Earth, the night sky can look peaceful and unchanging, but the universe as seen in gamma-rays is a place of sudden and chaotic violence. Using gamma-ray telescopes, astronomers witness short but tremendously intense explosions called gamma-ray bursts, and there is nothing more powerful.
    No one is sure what causes gamma-ray bursts. Favored possibilities include the collision of two neutron stars or a sort of super-supernova that occurs when extremely massive stars explode. One thing is certain: gamma-ray bursts happen in galaxies far, far away -- so far away that the distances are called "cosmological," beyond ordinary comprehension.
    Think about this: When you look up at the night sky, you are looking at the ultimate history book – one that goes back to the very beginning of what we call time. And each star is a chapter in the book. You are not really seeing the stars as they are now. You are looking at stars as they used to be when their light left them long ago. And the deeper we peer into space, the farther back in time we are looking. In fact, light from the galaxies farthest away is billions of years old.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shower_soprano34's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130555/script-recording-97252.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a really pleasant voice, and actually sound very authoritative about the subject. I believe it. There is some mouth noise and sibilance that you could process out, but it's not too bad. The recording sorely lacks the lower end of the spectrum, and needs to be filled out with some boost to the lower-mid and bass ranges, but at least it's nice and clean. You've also got too much hiss in the background, and combined with some clips or clicks in the audio, it almost sounds like an old record player. Maybe your reading is a little fast, too.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very clear, youthful voice. I would like to hear you sounding more enthusiastic/upbeat about the topic. You don't need to take it too far, keep it casual, just so as not to let phrases like "there is nothing more powerful" be too flat. Your pacing was good overall, but some natural short pauses to bring out specific points would help here, such as honoring the comma at "Using gamma-ray telescopes," where it seems a bit rushed.

    You should seek out a better microphone that better represents your tonal qualities.

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    New Home Buyer Guide

    Script:

    Suppose you want to purchase a house or apartment, and like most of us, you'll need a mortgage. Then you need to keep listening ... Because in the next 15-minutes, we'll show you how to get a mortgage, without any headaches. All you'll need to do is follow along with this audio-guide, watch your screen, and check off some boxes. Ready? To begin, click "house," "apartment," or "condo."

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear larryboy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4446/script-recording-30518.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    A contest entry...and you've entered. Let's see how you do first.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read, I liked it and felt it was conversational and easy in it's presentation.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read Larry.....I like the conversational style! That's what I have to work on!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I especially liked the pacing. In control of the session without being preachy.
    Nice read!

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    Next Generation

    Script:

    This e-learning explores the new design of the Next Generation Services program. The new design is in large part a response to user feedback, asking to make more functions more prominent and accessible. In many case, functions have been streamlined.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jenny MacArthur's recording

    First submission to Feedback Forum. Any feedback on sound, volume or read are all welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-144709/script-recording-103871.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Jenny, the quality of your recording was nice and so was the performance for the most part. If I had any constructive criticism, I would say try to liven your voice up just a bit as it comes off as a bit monotone to me at least. Also at the end of your recording, there was an obvious second take, which sounded a bit out of place due to the timing. Overall sounding good :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for you feedback Skeeter Jean. Will work at livening up more. Interestingly enough, the script was read in one take which makes me think I had too great a change in voice, volume or pitch or proximity to mic changed - I will work on that too!
    Jenny

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    Obesity

    Script:

    Obesity can affect you emotionally, as well as physically.

    Obesity may lead to:

    - Decreased self-esteem

    - Depression, anxiety, and other mental disorders

    - Social and professional discrimination. Obese individuals may face bias and stigma in many aspects of their life.

    People with obesity may have body pain and other health issues that can make it difficult to do the activities they enjoy including socializing with friends and family.

    These psychological and social factors may lead to isolation and loneliness.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Skmigs's recording

    So I previously uploaded a recording after using the de-clicker on Izoptope, and all heard vocal distortions. (Hopefully the my speakers will be unpacked this weekend and I can hear what everyone's talking about!) In the meantime, I turned down the sensitivity of the plug-in. My questions are: can you still hear distortion? And: how else can I get rid of clicks mid-word? I can manually edit out the ones in between, but in the middle of words this is near-impossible. I've used sprays, green apples, no caffeine/dairy, warm water… Now with the sensitivity turned down, I can still hear clicks… but how annoying is it for the listener? THANK YOU so much, you all are an incredibly help and resource to me.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-94626/script-recording-86644.mp3

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Skmigs,

    Thank you for choosing me to do your checkup. While I do hear a couple of random clicks in the audio, the overall quality is a bigger problem. Unfortunately, I would not be able to use this audio if it were sent to me for use in a production. This could partly be because you are trying to use a de-clicker, but my guess is that it is due to equipment and environment. The sound is muddy and a hollow sounding. I am hearing distortion which again could be due to the plugin being in the chain, or because you are over modulating (you are too loud) the mic or preamp. This would be easy to do on a low quality mic or preamp. Because I do not know which gear you are using, again it is hard for me to say where to focus your energy in solving these problems.

    Clicks can be removed in the middle of words. You need to zoom in on your wave forms tightly. Identify the click and remove the peak and valley of that part of the waveform. It takes practice and a DAW that allows you to zoom in that tightly. You should not be trusting software to do this for you. Software does not listen, it simply removes things based on mathematical values. This means it will remove much of the good stuff as well as the bad. This is a process that should be done manually while listening very closely. Proper mic technique can help eliminate many clicks, pops and other anomalies that you want to reduce during recording. Place yourself 6 - 8 inches from the mic, position it at an angle roughly similar to the angle of your nose and talk past it rather than into it.

    I'm sorry that this probably wasn't what you had hoped to hear, but it sounds like you have a nice voice, it should be represented better and more accurately than this recording offers. I hope this feedback helps.

    Dan Friedman

    Thanks again.

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 15, 2016 at 2:36PM

    Peer Feedback:

    You can get rid of the clicks that the declicker misses by using Spectral Repair in the RX Audio Editor. Move the Waveform/spectrogram opacity slider all the way to the right and zoom in on the time scale til you've got about 3 seconds of audio in the window. The clicks will show up as vertical bars in the waveform. Use the Time-Frequency selection tool to select the bar. If the click is in a black area, Attenuate works best. Otherwise Replace. If you've got RX5 (not sure about previous releases), you can use the Instant Process feature. But do make sure you listen to what it does, because sometimes it makes things worse (ends up sounding like an echo or something)...

    Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Whether you have the Spectral Repair will depend on the version of the RX suite you've purchased. I don't have it.

    Mid-word clicks, if not softened by De-clicker become something you have to learn to identify in the waveform. First of all, make sure you're properly hydrated before reading to keep these problems to a minimum. Also practice techniques at the mic to keep lip smacks and clicks to a minimum. But there are almost always going to be one or two in any lengthy read.

    If you listen carefully and identify a word where a click is identifiable, zoom in on that word...the waveform. You'll then find the syllable it's in...zoom in as far as you can and you'll see a very jagged "lil' bastard' lurking on that wave form that's very different than the rest of it. If you wave form is smooth and there's a click, you'll see a very sudden disturbance in the smoothness. If you're in a part of a syllable where the waveform is rather "up and down" but not clicky...but suddenly a click gets in there, you'll see where that "up and down form" has a pronounced thicker waveform with additional "jagged" peaks ON the form.

    Once you've learned how to ID them, you can try what I do. I try and find peaks or valleys on either side of the click and highlight the wave form from peak to peak or valley to valley so that if I delete that click, the waveform will almost be the same at the in and out points of the deletion. This works 95% of the time for me. The segment will be so short, no one will notice it. The other 5% are usually tongue flaps on "L" syllables that I might have to re-read the phrase and punch it in. Most of the time, the little search, find, delete works for me.

    Some DAWS will let you "draw" as if with a pencil to correct the waveform. None of the DAWs I've tried and/or have have that capability.

    Peer Feedback:

    What version of RX do you have, Tom? I'm pretty sure spectral reapir has been part of the stand-alone app since at least RX2. Looks like they made it a plugin in RX3, then undid that in RX4.

    Peer Feedback:

    Since I am still a wannabe, I hardly feel qualified to critique. The voice and diction made for a pleasant and easy listen. The previous respondents probably have far better trained ears than do I.

    Peer Feedback:

    4. Beyond that. I refuse to answer any further inquiries due to my refusal to incriminate myself for being an under-utilizer. Dammit. Was just using the plug-ins.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks all. As usual, this is very helpful. Sundance, I will look at the editor function today and see if I can figure that out. Tom, also appreciate the tips for manually deleting them. I've tried before, but I am hoping with the details you added I get a better eye for it.

    Unfortunately, the professional feedback from Edge still heard distortion and poor sound quality in general. Maybe even my mic and pre-amp being subpar. It's discouraging, but better to know this now than waste my time continuing to send in auditions. I have to get through one more move in March, and then I'm going to hire someone to help me create a studio space and check my equipment. (I use a Rhode NT1A and Scarlett 211. Not the top-of-the-line, I know, but high enough quality I thought I would be OK. ). Wondering if I head to B&H they could make see if the mic was damaged in one of the moves... never heard any bad reviews of that mic before?

    Not giving up. Thanks again everyone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok..cranking up my headphones higher than I usually use them, you CAN hear some kind of ringing in your vocal track...almost sounds like a music stand resonating slightly....and it goes away between phrases.

    There's NOTHING wrong with the Scarlet input you're using and the Rode mic is pretty well regarded in the mid-price range of condenser mics. It's got very low self-noise and it's not too sharp in the upper registers either.

    What specifically did they criticize about your sound? Care to share that input?

    Peer Feedback:

    To be fair, he didn't know what equipment I was using, he just theorized it could be an issue.

    He said overall quality was problematic: muddy and hollow-sounding. Unusable.
    He could hear distortion. This he didn't know if it was the plug-in, me being too loud (as I've mentioned previously, I'm actually too soft-spoken), or my equipment... adding on that it would easily occur with a subpar amp and/or mic.

    Hm. I have no idea what the ringing could be.
    Outside of the pillows and moving blankets I have in the temp studio, I am using a porta booth. Maybe that's hurting more than helping?

    Peer Feedback:

    A port-a-booth isn't going to create distortion but might allow room noise to still enter into the sound chain. Things have to be considered such as how you address the mic (distance from, angle from front of your face, etc) and what your raw sound is like.

    Chasing the best sound within a given space can be difficult sometimes. It might be worth your while to contact George Whittam and see if he can evaluate your sound with fuller knowledge of how you're doing everything.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks. You're right -- at this point, George would be the best next step. Will probably wait until the next (and final!) move in March so I'm not wasting money evaluating a space I only have for 6 weeks. Will practice in the meantime getting rid of those clicks.

    You're such an asset to this community, I really appreciate your input!

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    Online Course Catalog

    Script:

    Welcome to our on-line course catalog. This catalog provides you with detailed information on all of our 130+ technical skill courses, plus more than 50 safety and health courses for your training needs. Here's a few tips for getting the most out of our catalog. Our technical skills courses are organized into a series of topically related courses. Most series consist of 5 to 10 comprehensive courses. To view the courses available in each series, just select the series from the menu below.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear irvj's recording

    Trying the elearning narration genre. I think it might be more of my wheelhouse. All feedback is welcomed.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-16992/script-recording-111482.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice. I enjoyed your delivery and pacing, sounded really professional

    Peer Feedback:

    irvj, Very nice read. Great rich deep voice, it will serve you well!
    I think your performance was spot on and fits this read nicely. It's very believable. One note on recording quality, and this is nit-picky, is it sounds like you're using a noise gate, but haven't done the noise reduction behind the gate yet. That makes a static sound within your voice as the gate opens then closes, because the background noise is still there. I'd recommend doing the noise reduction before the gate and see how that works out for you.
    Best,
    Caleb

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    Wow you have an amazing voice and yes this does sound like your wheelhouse! The pacing was good and enunciation as well. Probably needs just a tad more emotion to get the listener interested, than you for sharing!

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    Thanks for tor the listen and feedback! You all bring up some valid points that I'll definitely incorporate in my next recordings. I've also been trying to tweak the noise gate settings to get a cleaner sound Camertz08.. Thank you all for the critique!

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    Very nice read Irv, you a have good diction and vocal tone with a solid delivery, very suitable for this genre!

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    Appreciate the feedback teggray