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Script Genres > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

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    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Script:

    Script:

    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf
    Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    102 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-409/script-recording-29189.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Crystal! I love the dryness of your delivery here. Reading the script, I couldn't wait to hear it. With that dryness I can hear some of your humor but I'd love to hear more! I mean, let's face it, this is funny and the script makes that clear. Not "making fun of" but "Good grief, ladies, lemme help you out". It also felt a little bit slow to me but that might just be me. Feel free to take my comments with a grain of salt as I'm such a newbie but I wanted to jump in with my thoughts. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Since I live in Texas, I also recorded a version with a more "regional" accent but decided not to post it yet. I was trying to capture some of the humor but didn't want to push the envelope too far. Thanks for the tips, though. I'll try out your suggestions and see what happens.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm from Texas, too! I'd love to hear the regional version but I can see that might not be what one would go for in something like this. But bringin' the Texas sass without the accent would sound great!

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm from Texas too...but given the script, I'm not sure I should say anything beyond that!

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh, go ahead Tom. Get some sass in this forum.

    Peer Feedback:

    Monday, Monday, I just might load up some sass and see what y'all think...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, Kristin, the the comments. I understand what you're saying and truly appreciate your help. Yes, I've been over-compensating and trying really hard to "do it right". I've not relaxed as I could and will continue practicing to relax in the reading more. As a tai chi instructor, I know what I should do--it's in the doing where I often stumble. Again, thank you for fitting and timely advice and encouragement.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the pacing is a bit too slow. Each word has an individual chance to breathe as there's a bit of a pause between each one when it wouldn't be that way in normal conversation.

    Example of how it sounded: "There...is a simple solution for...large-chested women."

    The ellipses are marking areas with unnatural pauses. Try a little bit of a faster pace by pretending you're talking to someone asking you for advice.

    "But my big boobs stop me from hitting the ball!"

    You step in as the voice of experience. You're confident because you've been there and you're about to tell her what works.

    Good volume. Good use of pitch change to hit "away" toward the end.

    Fun read choice!

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    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Script:

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    62 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Crystal's recording

    I was trying to have some fun while practicing so this is what I came up with. I figured the script sort of lent itself to some levity and I needed to finish out the day on the upbeat.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-409/script-recording-30651.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Crystal,

    This is a hilarious script, and I think you've definitely got the right tone for the read. I think the big thing that you should work on is trying to eliminate those spaces that you put in the middles of the phrases. I sympathize because I'm often guilty of the same thing haha. But I think if you can just make the read smoother overall, it could be really great. Good luck.

    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Crystal.
    Yes, good job with the light-hearted tone but watch out for the awkward gaps in the middle of phrases. Great example: "allowing......more room to swing freely." Work to eliminate those without increasing the rate significantly. Keep that smile/emotion.

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    A Story

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    98 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amina93's recording

    Ignore the audio quality, I'm working in a dorm room off of a dinosaur of a laptop :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97230/script-recording-85149.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice sound. Just remember to watch your pronunciation: the word temporal is pronounced temper-al not tem-poral.

    Peer Feedback:

    The proper pronunciation of "temporal" is TEM-per-ul not tem-PORE-ul.

    http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/temporal?s=t

    The word "every" appears five times. You stressed it 3 out of 5 times. I would suggest that, as a modifier, the word that comes after it is the more operative word to be stressed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow your voice is very good for a spot where you are storytelling or narrating as a young, enthusiastic boy or girl.

    I feel like this would benefit from adding more variety to your delivery when describing the ways that different cultures have told stories.

    I think the 'Incans' line lends itself to adding a little bit of a flair. Really paint the picture of shadows dancing against a stone backdrop with the vivid flames crackling away. Make the stars and spear sound a little more wondrous, far off or epic.

    Lastly I feel like the idea of making something eternal is really important and needs a little bit of emphasis as a result.

    Hope this helps! Keep at it!

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    A Story

    Script:

    A story
    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    91 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jrandy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117268/script-recording-92555.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hiya.... I am a novice ..so I may not have the experience to provide accurate feedback. Anywho... I would alter the tempo and pitch at certain points in the script. Also, I would bring up the volume a bit. I also think you could be a little dramatic as this time period is quite exciting.

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    A Story

    Script:

    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

    Script from Edge Studio's 5,498 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

    107 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-87766.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Liked that read a lot. A pleasant voice. Your delivery kept me interested to keep on listening. Recording quality is good. Job well done

    Peer Feedback:

    'sunrise' really stood out to me in that it seemed to be followed by too long of a pause.
    'fleeting temporal' has the same issue.
    It's one thought but it sounds like "Fleeting temporal" is the end of a sentence when it's supposed to be one thought.

    You perfectly captured the 'dances with fire' line and used pitch to effectively communicate that these are really at the essence of human life. You gave "human life" the little touch of gravity it deserved.

    Really awesome stuff! Lots of subtleties in pitch where they needed to be.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TJS's recording

    Hey guys please tell me how I did on this one and what you would change. Thanks in Advance!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-74154/script-recording-77413.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Correct me if I am mistaken, but it appears that you are sitting down because I can hear the creaking of your chair. Once after "story", again after "stone walls", and at the end of the recording. And there are some places in the middle of sentences that could never be edited out without sacrificing the continuity of the narrative.

    There's also a lot of mouth noise, mostly lip smacking between sentences and before you inhale, and especially at the top before you even start speaking. And a little nasal click after "sunrise". You should practice keeping your mouth open at the end of a phrase and before you inhale - sometimes it is impossible, but often times not. That will cut down on some of the mouth noise.

    Need a tapped T on "moment" instead of just the glottal "momehnn"- sounds a little California Valley Girl, "Oh, no you dihnehn!"

    Watch "ih-ternal" for "ee-ternal"

    Your voice is well suited for narration, but you need to be more cognizant of the extraneous noises - chair noise, mouth noise and clicks. Some can be edited out and replaced with tone. And some diction or elocution could be cleaner and clearer.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank You so much. Your feedback is definitely going to be used! I really do appreciate it and anymore that can be given. Yes right now I do have a stool that is old and wooden haha but my plan is to replace it in my studio with something metal that makes no noise. Great ears to be able to hear that though! Where can I get ears to hear all that?! Hahaha

    Thanks so much again.

    Peer Feedback:

    TJS ---
    I'm in complete agreement on James' critique. that's gold, btw.
    so, enunciation - lots of opportunity to polish up, but don't make it sound mechanical.

    The pace or editing seemed choppy - IMO, you should tighten that up.

    the recording quality itself sounded pretty good to me in headphones. no discernible room noise or other artifacts. James mentioned the clicks.
    So, most of the critique is performance itself.

    but it did hear the chair creaking! lol. Maybe switch to a stool..!

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    All you need to do is turn up the volume to your headset (always edit with earphones on) and look at the zoomed-in waveform to see the anomalies (little "blips" in the spaces between sentences). My mic is sensitive enough to pick up my growling stomach.

    A metal chair (even a wooden chair) might be worse, too reflective a surface, and metal can reverberate with odd harmonics that could show up in the recording. If you must sit (for long form narration and audiobooks), get a nice upholstered, well-oiled office-type chair (the cloth will not reflect sound and the oil will cut down on squeaking). But watch for the static charge that might occur, you could zap your equipment. For shorter pieces of copy (commercial copy, PSA's, etc.), it's better to stand so that you can be expressive with your entire body - it comes out in the read.

    Your recording environment seems to be fairly quiet - no echo. There is some low level ambient room tone (noise/hiss), but it is not that egregious. It might be taken care of with a noise elimination plugin or processing (depending on what DAW you are using).

    Peer Feedback:

    The 't' in moment was removed and the "H" sound after 'moment' seemed to get a little extra kick to it as a result.

    A lot of times verbs should be hit or emphasized in some way. A word like 'painted' may benefit from a bit of pitch change. You want to sell that these are unique and different ways of storytelling so you have to give each a little bit of a different delivery.

    Some unnaturally long pauses throughout the read. After 'fire' for instance.

    Most of the pacing and volume seemed right.

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    78 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Yvonne Lynch's recording

    I would like feedback on my sound quality and my read - thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-30434/script-recording-82363.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not an expert on sound quality so take this with a grain of salt. Listening with my headphones I can hear a lot of static (but don't hear it w/o headphones?). It cuts out for a moment 10 seconds in and then comes right back. Not sure how that could be happening. Double check all your connections. Analyzing the three seconds the static cuts out, I'm hearing a touch of reverb. Anything you can do to help absorb the sound in your recording space will help.

    Good read. Be careful to stay true to the script. You said "a" chisel instead of "the" chisel.

    Great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    There's definitely some kind of electronic interference in the recording. could be a bad cable or your mic and/or interface is too close to another electronic device.

    Also sounds like you're applying noise reduction which is pulling some of the natural frequencies from the voice, leaving it sound hollow and metallic.

    Difficult to troubleshoot without knowing your setup - mic, interface, computer, DAW, room, etc.

    Peer Feedback:

    i really like your voice however there's some serious feedback in your recording. I wonder if you were too close to the computer? i have had this problem in the beginning.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for comments - jesdoit1, you said you had feedback problems at the beginning, how did you deal with it?

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    A&e Fashion Special

    Script:

    If you're in the market to liven up your décor, here are some racy new items you can buy now to express your colorful side!

    Why not invest in functional art? Charlotte Beyorlin's geometric rugs blend swatches of velvet, suede, wool and leather to create a truly sensory delight.

    Fly away on this zany propeller stool. Aviation inspired legs support, an elegant velvet cushion, blending frivolity and form.

    Hand-stitched leather lamps can really lighten up a room. Mix and match the textured shades for a funky effect.Hang on to these fuzzy hangers from Domis. Unique bristles deter wrinkles and make a colorful addition to a bare closet.

    And here's another way to add some edge and comfort to your home. These authentic Tibetan lamp accessories are very hot among today's designers.

    52 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kate's recording

    My second script recording/upload to the Edge website. All feedback welcome. Kate

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7330/script-recording-30729.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    One thing I would mention is that the read feels a bit "scripted," meaning that it doesn't feel natural. Try to relax a little more and sound more personal. Your stiffness is also noticeable in the flow of the piece.

    That being said, you have a great voice for this. I feel like with a bit more confidence in you, you could really sell this stuff to anyone with a wallet. Good job, and keep on going!

    Peer Feedback:

    Kate - great clear voice, just a couple of wee suggestions. Vary the pace and the tone a bit more - each object is so different from the previous one - zany stools and Tibetan lamp accessories did get the same tone. Perhaps a hint of a wink in your voice at the beginning to let us know this isn't your ordinary furniture accessory ad.
    Looking forward to hearing more from you - super job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You hit the words racy and colorful real nicely. I wonder if it might sound a bit better if the playfulness you brought to those words (which was very good!) could be extended to the surrounding words. As it stands I like that you emphasized those words but they stand in a bit of a stark contrast compared to the rest of the sentence in an off way.

    Your reading of suede, wool, leather could use a little variety. Add in some pitch changes to liven up the reading of a list.

    Playful is a great way to describe this script and you nailed it on some lines but a lot of sections of the script drag without that same tone. Just try to keep that tone consistent throughout and I think you've got an amazing read!

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    Abiogenic Theory

    Script:

    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

    45 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ECT893's recording

    This is my first upload and I'm feeling a tad uncertain about it... Your input would be awfully helpful. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4510/script-recording-25305.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your articulation and annunciation stand out! But it sounds a little forced.
    Clearly you are reading. Relax! Your voice has a pleasant timbre.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're right on that one, Henry. This becomes increasingly apparent the more I hear scripts by other readers and the ease with which they deliver their material. The art of relaxing is going to be a long process for me to master... Hey, thanks for taking the time to comment!

    Peer Feedback:

    Its hard to get out of reader mode especially with a script like this. Try envisioning one person in front of you that you are explaining this to. That might help make it a little more personable.Good job

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    Abiogenic Theory

    Script:

    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

    98 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear RobSmith's recording

    This is for an UpWorks position I bid on. They are looking for inexpensive talent with skills for a new project with limited budget but if the right person is found and willing to be paid by "listens" to their English courses then it would become ongoing as they build the business. Does this sound like something you'd listen to if you were trying to learn a new language? I chose this script due to the complexity of the words and concepts being comparable to a new language. I had to look up how to pronounce it so it seemed appropriate to me. =)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-112746/script-recording-89160.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not all that familiar with UpWorks - had to Google them. If it's anything like Fiver, I myself would stay away from it. Only my opinion. I place a higher premium on my time and talent.

    As for the read:
    If I am understanding your description correctly, this is for a kind of "English As A Second Language" kind of thing? If that is so, then this script's subject matter is too dense, esoteric and complicated for someone who is trying to learn English. Something with simple everyday phrases and good grammar that can be universally useful might be more in line with their intent.

    If this is intended as an English Class, then grammar and spelling and sentence structure might be more appropriate - as boring as that may be. (My entire junior year of high school English class was taken up with diagramming sentences.)

    At any rate, the delivery is too fast. A scientist, marine biologist or some other academic may be able to absorb this material and these concepts without batting an eye, but an average layman listener will probably tune out after "accretion of solids" (basically, eating and getting bigger). Also, as a teaching tool, attention should be given to well articulated words and phrases. At this clip, some things got garbled and smushed together. So someone not that familiar with the English language may misinterpret. The big example here is, "regions of origin" - it's so fast and inarticulate, it sounds like one word. (In the German language, long compounded words are often used as a single entity. So a German hearing this may be confused as to what a "regionsovorigin" is.)

    So my answer to your question is, no. Best to KISS. Look for material in phrase book translations, directions and the like. Rosetta Stone is a good example of how to use proper and colloquial phraseology (and pace) to effectively teach the intricacies of learning a new language. If you, as an English speaking person, needed to research pronunciations for this piece of copy, how lost would you think a Non-English speaking person is going to be?

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    Aboigenic Theory

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    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

    I haven't posted an E-learning script. Any comments welcome. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113255/script-recording-93709.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Greetings,

    Solid read to my ears. Good pace, interpretation and energy. I also appreciate your phrasing through some fairly long sentences. Being very nit picky I would point out the lost word "and" in the last clause of the last sentence. Not a big deal.

    I seem to detect perhaps a little bass reflection in the audio. More bass trapping maybe? Or maybe my ears.

    Overall very well done.
    Best in the new year!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    I know sound's not great. Please just comment on performance. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/adopted child 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Sorry, because I think I confused you with one of the ladies on the site when you critiqued my work, recently. It's because the two of you submitted recordings for the same piece in recent days and I got mixed up. Anyway, sorry!

    You missed the word "background". I liked the choice to ignore some punctuation, and I think that was a tricky spot that you handled very nicely. Very clear. Hard to comment on the quality of your voice with the recording quality so bad, so I'm not sure but you might warm it up a little?

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows.

    Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations.

    This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

    62 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    This is a re-recording of this script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87112.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I went back and listened to your previous recording of this and found the general tone preferable to this one. What was missing from that one was the amount of "voice" you put into this one - that one was a little too subdued.

    I can hear the edits in this one.The overall "flow" is a bit broken up by them.

    Watch the long A sound when "uh" would sound more (say it with me) conversational.

    Also, some of the emphasis on certain words seems a little off, as far as script analysis and messaging goes. For instance: The second sentence in the first recording, the emphasis on "grows" seems a better choice than the emphasis on "child" in this take - the messaging is clearer. And even though this is a serious, heart string tugging subject, there's no reason that it can't be delivered with a positive smile like a pastor might.

    A little mouth noise here and there, especially toward the end.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

    136 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87061.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording was fine -- clear and noiseless.
    The performance, to me, lacked vitality. You didn't seem passionate or enthusiastic about this topic. Also, the delivery was too slow and had too many pauses.
    I would dearly love to hear your re-recording of this copy, pretending you were telling this to your best friend and sounding as if this was personally meaningful to you.
    Your voice: yum. very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    @leawms
    thank you for the feedback
    I will try to muster up some more emotion, I didn't want it to be a tear-jerker, and even tried to imagine it being played on tv, and I was talking to my granddaughter's stuffed owl (trying to focus on talking to "one" person)

    I will be rerecording this script.
    Again, thank you for YOUR TIME in giving feedback.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Trying some acting things along with trying to continue to make strides in Neutral American with no regionalisms!! Thanks Jeff

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Adopted Children.L.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jeff, your comment makes me wonder what your natural regional accent is, because I couldn't pick up on anything -- so great job there! And a nice clean, steady read overall. My wish for your performance was that you had more warmth... as you're talking about kids (even in an instructional way), I wonder if you experimented with anything more touchy-feely emotional. Perhaps that was a choice you made? Good job again on the dialect.
    -b.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very, very good. The only New York-area regionalisms I heard was the first "their" (the final "their" was spot on), the "d" in "during" was pronounced as a [dz], basically a [j], and the "i" in provide had a slight diphthong issue. Most Americans say [ai], but the "it" in this recording sounds like [awi]. I'm not sure if I'm identifying it correctly, but it was slightly noticeable. Maybe other listeners can help me out.
    I say good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi bex!
    Thanks for the thoughts! I actually tried to get away from the Mr. Warmth thing because my last 5 reads all were starting to sound the same and that was the one consistant thing I kept hearing... So I guess it worked??? Hahaha!!!
    I'm happy you didn't detect any regionalism... Been working really hard on minimizing it! Thanks!!!!
    Hope to hear you soon!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Nick!!!!
    GREAT EARS!!!!
    You are dead on!!!! thanks for the help I'm still working on it but you picked out all the right words!!!
    Thanks for your help!!!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read! good sound quality. Can not really hear any regionalisms in there.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

    Script:

    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-54147.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice solid read. On their own sounded a tad off. Otherwise the the kind of read that wouldn't turn anyone away. Good show.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Richurd. Funny - can't get anything past you - I edited in "on their own". Haha. Should have just kept what I originally had!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Marianne, I thought your performance was great - it was friendly, conversational, and informative. The pacing was smooth as well, yet you still managed to stress the right words and came in at right under 30 seconds. Very good! Punching in words and phrases is tricky, but you'll master it with practice. Keep up the great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks much Javier!

    Peer Feedback:

    Read with crystalline clarity.

    Peer Feedback:

    great inflection. sounded really good. nice recording.
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    I completely bought your interpretation of that. Nice one. Love your contest entries too, I've been busy producing and haven't entered in a little bit. But that's good too ;) You rock
    Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi - mwjmc, dfsaund and Nodo420 - thanks so much for your kind words. Keeps me motivated to stay with it! Marianne

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    Air Processor 2000

    Script:

    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87062.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Way too slow. You sound bored by the entire script so the listener will feel the same.. This is not an interesting or exciting script so a big part of your job is to make sure the listener does not fall asleep before it is over. You are actually supposed to care about what you are saying so the listener feels it is important. This is no more than 40 seconds of script, not 1:03.

    So, try it much faster, with enthusiasm obvious in your voice. The line "Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation." is exciting and good news for example. Sound happy about it. It smells nice. Wow!

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok cool I understand I was kind of torn between doing it fast and also well if this is a instructional then the person is probably going to try to follow along so I was trying to give person enough time to follow what I was saying with what they were doing so... point well taken, thanks Tom.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with Tom, it is a bit plodding. Take a clue from the last sentence. If whoever is watching this missed a step, they can go back or play the whole thing over again.

    Watch breathing in the middle of a sentence. It is a natural thing in "conversation" but not so much when offering instruction. A process has to be clear and concise without being broken up. However, it still has to be somewhat "conversational" in that we normally don't use the long A sound but rather the shorter "uh" sound, as in "uh new capsule."

    Did you imagine what the video might look like? Can you see yourself performing these steps while describing them to someone (one single person)? It would flow more smoothly. You might even physically pantomime the steps as you describe them into the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I get your concern about the video, and maybe it will run for even longer than 1:03. That's really the job of the editor to fit the audio to the video. Each of the sentences need to be spoken at proper speed (as directed), inflection and enthusiasm. The editor will stretch as much as needed by simply increasing the space between sentences. Without seeing the video the audio track alone would sound strange. Choppy at best, but.each sentence will sound natural on its own.

    Peer Feedback:

    @Tom Lennon...
    RIGHT!!! I guess I didn't consider the fact that they could edit the timing according to the video - (brrrr-duh!) and I was trying in my minds eye visualizing the video playing so maybe thats why some hesitation on my part... I knew it wasn't a super good read or even a really good read.

    All points are well taken! Thank you all. From now on I'll try to discern whether this script is one that will have some post editing done to it and just try to convey the message. I was also a little concerned about any technical issues. My recording space is basically in the middle of my apartment in a very busy traffic laden area, in the past I was getting lots of feedback concerning the noises, so hopefully I've reduced those to an acceptable level.

    Again, thanks for the feedback. I will be rerecording this script.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    My 3rd take, of this script - trying to incorporate the suggestions of my fellow voice actors. Would also appreciate any critique on the technical end, trying to improve the recording space/edits. In advance thank you - you are appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87313.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Charles,

    You have a folksy type of voice, although you are a little rushed. I also find my self doing the same thing. Picture your audience and talk to them or Him or She. You are explaining to them the directions be concise, but let them follow along.

    Peer Feedback:

    @marysboy1 not to seem ignorant, but I guess in this case I am... what is a "folksy" voice? I've never heard that description before.

    Hmmm, I didn't "feel" rushed and previous takes had longer pauses which according to others didn't necessarily need to be there and if they did they could easily be increased post, so I read this one with minimal pauses.

    Stay-tuned for 'take 4'.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChasA's recording

    This is my re-record of this script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99389/script-recording-87119.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Much better pacing than the previous recording.

    Two obvious things to be aware of:
    - Again, the long A sound.
    - Breathing in the middle of a sentence - which sometimes can be edited out.

    One thing you may do with scripts like these is to visually re-format them to trick your brain into going step by step. For instance, how would you have tackled it if it looked like this:

    - To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit OFF, then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping.

    - Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap.

    - Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap.

    - Insert the complete cap into the air purifier.

    - Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow, and then switch the unit back ON.

    - Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation.

    - Either choose REPEAT to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

    Now each "idea clump" is a separate entity and it is also more obvious where you can separate the ideas and breathe (to be edited out in post).

    I use this trick all the time to further clarify what the "idea clumps" are and where it's important to give slight pauses for emphasis or to allow the listener to react. It also forces me to propel those "idea clumps" on one breath so they don't get busted up into fragments.

    Peer Feedback:

    @jamesromick thanks a ton - I'll be using your suggestion. Sorry I haven't responded to your critique more timely... back on the road in the 18 wheeler, sometimes time just gets away from me - you are (and the so many others who participate) appreciated. Again Thanks

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    Practice Recording:

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    I am posting this in response I gave to a fellow member here. Kind of putting my money where my mouth was with regard to the feedback. I'd appreciate yours, I was working on putting the phrasing together in such a way as to make it interesting. Only post production was, dc correct, de noise, removed a breath or 2 and cut the empty space to fit.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-26942.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well done, Nodo

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    I am just starting out...the sound quality was clean. The tone and pace were great "convince no one" might have used more impact. Hope this helps
    MB

    Peer Feedback:

    I think if you record yours with similar phrasing and low key inflection until the end, it will sound better than this. Keep at it brother! The fun is in the practice! Well, that and getting a paid gig from time to time! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    WOW! I felt like I was actually attending a lecture! What I also liked about this was your pacing, as it began somewhat calm as a normal lecture would begin and then you compelled and captivated the audience by the emotion used. Please continue giving us great reads! Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your only real fault you didn't pronounce "artificial." It's been good working with you all.

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    DOH! Henry, great ear... I completely missed that! I am going to have to do a bit more quality control on my readings! DRAT!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Nodo, sounded pretty good to me. The first thing I noticed was that it sounded like you edited some of the sentences together(maybe picking the best takes). Is that the case? Let me know because I am also working on training my ear for different things to help better my reviews and my self direction.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very strong read, Nodo. This would keep my interest as a narration. Better than my own attempt at it. If you are focusing on the phrasing, it might be interesting to look at Solzhenitsyn's original words, which are different than this script. Look about halfway down page 2 of his speech on the Nobel prize website (http://www.nobelprize.org/nobel_prizes/literature/laureates/1970/solzhen...). Here it is:
    "But a work of art bears within itself its own verification: conceptions which are devised or stretched do not stand being portrayed in images, they all come crashing down, appear sickly and pale, convince no one. But those works of art which have scooped up the truth and presented it to us as a living force - they take hold of us, compel us, and nobody ever, not even in ages to come, will appear to refute them."

    The original text seems even trickier to regulate to me. The only edit in your recording that I could hear was the cut that came after "turned into images".
    David

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks David, and thanks for the link. Wow, that thing is LONG. I actually like the original text better, sounds more, I don't know, majestic. I may give that one a run. Not the whole darn thing though! Thanks a lot for your comments and the research, Can't wait to hear new scripts from all of you!

    Peer Feedback:

    I wish I had used that script!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Beverly Ann's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Allstate Insurance for Feedback Forum.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it sounds very nice. Your voice is very reassuring and friendly. Two little nitpicks: "And now" needs to be more fluid - don't pronounce the "d" of "And." And the pause after "However" is a bit long.

    Peer Feedback:

    A little bit of mouth noise. There's something about the "a" in "damaged", "can't" and "damages" that belies some regionalism (Cleveland? or Chicago?). And "...you can take..." was contracted to "you c'n take".

    This has been mentioned a few times by some other people. I don't know what the "rule of thumb" is on this forum, but most posters don't slate their spots, they just dive into the copy. If you've posted the copy, we're reading along. I think the first line is just a typo (All State Insurance is also a typo) and isn't part of the body of the copy - just it's title. No need to slate it, it adds nothing to the actual read.

    Hard to put my finger on it, but I miss the celebratory nature of the copy. It's like a graduation or a new baby. This should sound like a really big deal. This was just sort of a pat on the back.

    The emphasis on "YOUR home" and "YOU'LL be covered" sounded odd to me, because you've already congratulated me (YOU just bought...). So, I think the more operative words are the THINGS that are COVERED.

    I think you hit your stride after that.

    Have you ever taken Danielle's Technique 101 webinar? She teaches something she calls a "pivot". "However" is a good word to use that technique. 3 syllables - first one low, second one high, third one low (think "on the OTHER hand").

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments, James your the second person who has guessed I'm from Chicago, interesting and I need to work on that, I'm from the Northeast, never been to Chicago or Cleveland. Also about the slating, I've been taught that if your not asked to slate, don't.

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    Allstate Insurance

    Script:

    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Home Owners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you’ll be covered, and that’s a good feeling. However there are some things that can’t be replaced, so that’s why it’s so important to prevent the damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you’ll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Rodriguez's recording

    Outside of my usual recording space, forgive the possible sirens in the background.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-124840/script-recording-99450.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality wasn't perfect as you mentioned you were outside your usual recording space. I loved your vocal performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very well done! You had more emotion in the second phrase onward, but I liked it all the same. When you say congratulations it wasn't with too much enthusiasm, but it was also sincere. I can tell you have worked on it. Quality of recording is excellent despite the background. It wasn't distracting. I like listening to your sound. It is friendly and trusting. Thank you for sharing and keep up the great work!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jeff Hoffman's recording

    Tomorrow is my First Class!! Can't wait!!!! Would love some feedback on this one. Working on natural delivery and Neutral American dialect.. Thank you everyone!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Allstate Insurance.L.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Are you really glad that this person got Allstate? From the first sentence, you sounded a little "down". This is a case where if you think you've gone "over the top", it's probably just enough and you can go further. Think of how happy you would be at a relative's wedding, graduation or " Jeff Hoffman. You've just won the Superbowl! Where are you going now?" This is really a big step for that person that bought the insurance. It's a big deal! And now I'm going to tell you about all of the wonderful things that are in store for you.

    I think I understand where you were going with the sincere tone on "...and that's a good feeling." But I think that it's too somber for the congradulatory message here. You might think of it this way. "...and that's a good feeling. Isn't it? We're so glad you chose our company. And, oh, let me tell you some other things......."

    Only regionalism that I detected that gave you away was "bought". It had a really rounded "o" instead if an "ah".

    Where's your class? And good luck and have fun with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James!
    I'm doing Techniques 101 tomorrow then starting my coaching!
    I can't wait!!!
    Thanks again for your comments... These as well as others in the past...
    Keep em coming!!!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Jeff,

    You will really like working with Danielle. I've done about 5 Tech 101's with her. I also had a coaching with her a few weeks ago at Edge in NYC. It was insiteful and a lot of fun. You will really enjoy yourself. I would urge you to take as many as you can. It's basically the same material, but she switches it up a bit from webinar to webinar.

    Peer Feedback:

    Will do James!
    Thanks again!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    So? How did it go?

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    Haha. Great James. Danielle is terrific and the class was really good! Time to go to work and try some things out!!! Ill be looking for your input!
    Best
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, James. This is Tonia from Maine. I was in the same techniques class, yesterday. I was the one coughing with the flu. Ugh. Still sick today. Day 8. This thing never ends. Anyway, loved the class, and I really enjoy your voice.

    I thought this read was really nice. I agree the second half of the first sentence could be a little more upbeat, but I thought "congratulations" felt very warm, and I'd just crank it up a titch on the second half. Notice you dropped the word "so" later on, but maybe that was an intentional decision.

    I thought you were going for serious, so not too broad a pitch range. The pace seemed medium to a touch slow, as one might have in a TV ad. "Spot on" I thought at first, but then I wondered about the demographic, for instance, would the VO be for a website after one's just pulled the trigger on buying their insurance? If that were the case, maybe read a touch faster?

    What I noticed most is that your voice sounds very warm and personal, even on a dry read, and I'm looking forward to hearing more of you in our classes together. I'm curious about what microphone you have. I haven't taken the plunge, yet, with any home studio setup, so you won't here me in the feedback forum for some time, but I have a deeper voice for a woman. What you have might work for me, too.

    Best,
    T

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia!!!!
    I felt so bad for you yesterday!!! I hope you feel better soon!!! In spite of your illness you sounded great! I'm taking The saturday tech and ringer classes on the 23rd and thinking of doing another tech 101 on the 24th! Then doing the business and others in march!!! Hope to hear you again!!!!
    Thanks for the suggestions!!!!
    I'm using an EV RE20. Lucky to be able to borrow it for now!!! Not sure if it's the right one, but because it's free... going with it for now!! I do like the overall sound though...
    Feel better and keep the comments coming!!!!! I will watch for yours as well!!!
    Best
    Jeff Hoffman

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh, I'm so jealous, Jeff. I want to dive in to the classes so badly, but I can't even read to my kids right now (Day 8 was yesterday and I still had a 101 fever!) and then next week is school vacation and we'll be away. Maybe I can swing the 23rd... I am signed up for the home studio class on the 10th, and I hope it will help me pick a mic for myself, then.

    I am feeling a bit better, today!

    I think your mic sounds great (but I know nothing technical!), and I'm excited to reach out to someone else who's entering the Edge process at the same time. It's going to be a blast! I'll be keeping my eye/ears out for you.

    Best,

    Tonia

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    Allstate Insurance

    Script:

    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Home Owners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you’ll be covered, and that’s a good feeling. However there are some things that can’t be replaced, so that’s why it’s so important to prevent the damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you’ll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Any comments appreciated. This is type of work I'm seeking.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really like it. You are very engaging and your diction and pacing are very good. Gret job!

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    American Airlines

    Script:

    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience.

    We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers.

    We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sherri.gray's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there! Just a bit of background noise. And it sounds as if maybe you might be breathing in through the nose(?). Otherwise, sounds great. You have a beautiful voice. Very clear.

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    Apple Pie Math

    Script:

    The recipe says we need six apples and three eggs to make the pie. Can you find the basket with six apples? Great! Now, we need to find three eggs. Which carton has three eggs? Oops, try again. You did it! Let's start measuring.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesskaufman7's recording

    Hi--I'm just in the basics of learning home studio work. This is unmastered audio in a temporary studio I just set up. Thoughts and suggestions welcome! This studio is for me to use and practice in for a month before I move to my new place and get set up properly. Thanks for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83796/script-recording-73945.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    That was a great read.Very up beat and encouraging .The phrase "You did it ! " was a touch too loud.Keep that same excitement but maybe back away from the mic or say it a little quieter to keep it at the same volume as the rest of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice job. I liked the cadence and the articulation - seems spot on for teaching children.
    great recording quality, too.

    well done.
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done. Great voice work for kids. Just a few level matching issues like the "You did it...let's start measuring." popped out a bit much.

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

    I am a stage actor making the transition. I just had my first radio ad, and through direction learned that I have a very hard time not using my "stage" voice. I recorded the Baby Massage bit a couple of days ago. I redid it, trying to speak in my normal voice. My questions are, Is this take better? Is my "stage" voice marketable as well (maybe teens, kids) or does it need to disappear altogether? Any thoughts are very welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97778/script-recording-77536.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Heatherly
    Nice. If you're a stage actor you already know how to take direction. You're 99% of the way there. Just keep practicing. Any voice work you do will always be at the whims of individual casting directors and what THEY want. Best advice - have fun! You'll win some and you'll lose some, but you already know that.
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    I can identify with you. I have been a stage actor for over 35 years and adjusting to the intimacy of doing VO is HUGE!

    A couple of suggestions that I found very helpful are:
    From Nancy Wolfson (and others):
    - Imagine that you are talking directly into someone's ear. You wouldn't use that stage voice that you would use to reach the cheap seats, you'd blow out that person's eardrums.
    - Imagine that you're having a phone conversation with a friend and you don't want the other people on the bus or train to be in on the conversation as well. Not a whisper, just more intimate.

    Even your "normal voice" may be a little too much voice in some instances.

    Yes, there are times that you're going to need that stage voice - for high energy spots, comic spots, animation and the like. But for something as intimate as this and targeted to a specific audience (imagine one person though, not an auditorium full of parents and grandparents), you have to (as one of my coaches puts it), "Gimme less voice." It could just be a matter of getting a little more intimate with the mic and softening your tone, a little more inward and chesty (resonant) rather than pointed and forward (out in front of the teeth).

    A couple of other things: You are very articulate, the voice is pleasant to listen to and you have a sense of how to break down the copy (interpretation). Don't punch the pronouns! (you & your "I know that you're talking to me!" - Nancy Wolfson again - however, there are exceptions and there are some in this copy). Your breathing is very good, no egregious (if any) mouth noises, a common problem for many. And your pacing is very good as well. I get it! However, watch "yer" for "your" or "you're" and "fer" for "for" (again, it was not egregious, but inconsistent).

    Peer Feedback:

    I do like this take better, in terms of confidence and connection to the copy, but the other was more VO sounding because it was more intimate. I'm not a stage actor, just really loud lol So this has been a pretty big thing for me too. Going back to what James was saying about Nancy's advice, use the front lower part of your throat and be sure you aren't "nicing" it up while you "devoice" to use another of Nancy's terms. She just gave me a lovely story about this yesterday :)

    The sound was a lot better in this one, but I could definitely hear some background noise from movement.

    Peer Feedback:

    +1 for what our colleagues said before.

    There were many things in this audio which pulled me in with your stream of consciousness and then there were some things that pushed me out again.

    "This video is for parents": your voice pulled me in and I was ready to hear more.
    Then... a slight exhalation right before "and grandparents". I know what what going on; however, by audio only, that almost always _sounds_ like you're bored or that you disagree with what comes immediately afterward.

    There is a little sameness in the pitch inflection of many sentences. They each sound like they have a beginning, middle, and end rather than relating with the sentences before and/or after.

    In the last sentence, I would connect the "or" with the second option rather than the first. In the audio, it comes out almost "or-a" like some Aussies say it. Connecting it with the second option mitigates that and provides a smoother delivery. Plus, it gives the listener time to digest the previous option before being invited to consider the next.

    All the best,
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow. Such great feedback!

    Bill, Thanks for that reminder and encouragement. I can be a bit of a perfectionist so the "have fun" is always helpful!

    James, Your talking-to-a-friend-on-a-train analogy really resonated with me. And, you caught me. I was absolutely picturing talking to a room full of parents.
    I did a third take that night which I think was my best vocally, as it had that resonant intimate quality you spoke of. I didn't post that one though because my delivery was awful. I had to keep concentrating to keep the resonance in my voice.
    Your comment on the punched pronouns made me laugh. Spot on. Thanks so much!

    Bean 420, Thanks especially for the comment on background noise. I've got 3 kids, so the noise factor is definitely an issue for me. I definitely need to turn my headphones way up.

    Steven, You are exactly right about the pause before grandparents. I am very animated in my face and body, and I had a feeling there would be some adjusting now that it's only my voice coming through. I confess that reading the scripts from the library is a challenge for me. I am used to plays and such and I am finding it hard to connect to these, but I am hoping that, with practice, it will come. Perhaps it will help if I use material that I have chosen from my own library. As for the predictable pitch inflection, you're right on. I am having a problem finding the proper breath support and find that I run out of breath in strange places. I thought if I used the punctuation as guides for breaths I'd be safer. I think my preplanned breathing led to preplanned inflection. Thank you for your insight!

    So excited to join this community and I look forward to learning from you all!
    Heather

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Heatherly23's recording

    My first upload. I am not a techie, so would especially appreciate advice on sound quality. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97778/script-recording-77440.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Heatherly23 --
    this is a nice read. you sound like a young mother, or someone to whom a young mother would immediately relate. you have the perfect voice for a baby-tips "explainer" video.

    I thought you could improve your pace. it was unnaturally fast at times, and slow at other times. I think this read calls for a steady pace, with a comfortable, reassuring tone.

    I admit that I didn't listen with headphones and can't offer sound quality opinion....plenty of others will.

    All that said, nice job.
    cheers!
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for the critique Dave! Your advice is spot on. I am a stage actor making the transition and finding that I have a bit of detraining to do.

    Thanks so much for your help,
    Heather

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Thoughts?? This is a different approach for me - haven't tried baby stuff before. All comments appreciated - trying to grow!! Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53234.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi MHeyden!

    I particularly like your voice but it did sound reading to me....I believe, that since it's a video we are talking about here, an introduction /presentation...it could be read in a more natural way as if you were the specialist talking to parents, grandparents......anyone in charge of a baby??

    If you listen to it with your eyes off the script or simply closed.....you will get what I mean and hope this helps you!

    All the best,
    Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Eva - yes, your comments are very helpful. It's funny - as I approached this, I had in my mind a hospital volunteer talking to the mother of a newborn - and it being her first baby. I envisioned the mother with big curious eyes trying to take in all the information (and only having about 3 brain cells funtioning because she just delivered a baby 2 days ago). As such, I was trying to be sweet and very slow with this new mother. I will try again - this time I will think the baby is 2 months old!! Haha. Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the warm and encouraging tone, Marianne. A little more variation in pacing and inflection, a less even delivery in other words, would give it a more conversational quality. Pretty darn good though. Your character here is a great fit for this script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Bill. I will redo this and try to incorporate these great ideas from you and Eva. Appreciate it! Marianne

    Peer Feedback:

    Marianne - To add to Bill's point. try this exercise. You know what this script is about. Put it into your own words. Just talk (record it) about about how important touch is to a newborn - from Mom, from Dad, Grandma & Grampa. Just the gist of it without looking at the script. Because you'll be forced to "visualize" for yourself what you're talking about. Use those immages when you go back to the script. And this is a good thing, yes? Enjoy it.

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    Baby Massage

    Script:

    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    This is a redo - trying to liven it up a bit. My last try was a bit too slow and lacking in energy. There's a bit of mouth noise here - I'm pretty close up on mic.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53408.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I feel that the energy level was a little to high. I was distracted by it. You have a pleasant sounding voice and your pace was fine.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks - I will try to find a happy medium! At first I was too low, now I'm too high! Haha - will keep at it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    I would really appreciate your feedback. I think I know where I made a couple of blunders, but before I try again, I want to know if you think the same. I am working on my "ear", as well as my . . .

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    Peer Feedback:

    As a listener I'd say this almost sounds like you're talking to the parents as if THEY are the babies. For this copy in particular, I'd go for a more happy and personable read.

    You do have a good tone to your voice. Very friendly sounding and GOOD for this kind of copy. It's your pacing and delivery that don't do it for me here.

    You sound a little bit tinny too. try messing with your eq and filters.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank-you much for the helpful tips and comments : ) It's very appreciated.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    The 1st one had some weird breaks. Let me know what you think of this one, please.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5791/script-recording-22709.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Greetings Heidi...

    The recording quality was pretty good, in fact, because it allowed me to hear a lot of clicking which sounded like mouth clicks or something else tapping lightly. If you listen with headphones or the speakers turned up you'll hear what I mean.

    As for the performance, it sounded as if you were reading it to a baby.. with wide inflection and emotion...too much inflection, I think as it detracted from the message. It's ok to talk in a warm, sympathetic voice, but be careful not to talk with as much change in emotion. It's kind of when you hold a little stuffed bear in front of a baby and go "Look at the little bear mommy has... tickle, tickle, tickle.. isn't he a cute little bearsy-wearsy?" Not sure if this makes sense.

    I think your overall emotion is good and you have a good feel for this script. Well done.

    - Ron

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ron~ Thank-you so very much for the specific feedback. I really appreciate it!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Ron. I sounded as tho you were reading it to the baby as opposed to reading it to the parents and grandparents. I thought it was way too slow for elearning. The diction was good and there were good dynamics and tone, just speed it up some.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank-you! I truly appreciate the help : )

    Peer Feedback:

    Hehee. That Ron is a kick! He's right though, you might try actually reading this to someone to hear yourself casually talking to another adult, and then see the real difference in delivery. Picking up the practice of pretending to speak to another person takes a little work, but it's what the industry is looking for these days. Other than that, you did a fine job here.

    Peer Feedback:

    LOVE the tip! Thank-you so much : )

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    Bank Employee Training Web Video

    Script:

    When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page for all client interactions. Please confirm the caller's Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the "next" button, like this. Great, now let's move on to step-2.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear HCOkeefe's recording

    Still working on getting comfortable at the mic, honing the delivery, amount of emotion, range, etc. No need to comment on background noise. Thanks for all your other input and criticism!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4732/script-recording-98835.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your a lot, the quality is really good - professional, casual, and diction very clear. The pace is best in the first sentence, perhaps a trifle slower in the next 2 sentences. Recording quality is very good, too. Hope this helps.
    DK

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, DK! After reading your comment, I 100% hear what you're talking about regarding the pacing. Cheers!

    Peer Feedback:

    You had a good interpretation of this copy. Vocal performance was good as well. Might want to be back just a tad on the mic. Nice job

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read! I agree that the pacing could pick up a bit throughout, especially after the first sentence. You could also try shorter pauses between sentences - the pauses between sentences 1-2 and 2-3 felt a bit long. I really like the friendliness that came into your voice in the last two sentences. Can you find spots to incorporate more of that tone throughout the read?

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    Booth Test - Caldera

    Script:

    A caldera is a cauldron-like volcanic feature usually formed by the collapse of land following a volcanic eruption. They are sometimes confused with volcanic craters. The word comes from the Spanish "caldera" and this from the Latin "caldaria", meaning "cooking pot". In some texts the English term cauldron is also used. In 1815 the German geologist Leopold von Buch visited the Las Cañadas caldera of Teide on Tenerife, and the Caldera de Taburiente on La Palma, both in the Canary Islands. When he published his memoirs, he introduced the term caldera into the geological vocabulary.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MikeChdwck71's recording

    This is ONLY a quick reading of some text in order to test a new booth set up. This is NOT being performed, it's just a sound check. I think the recording has too much ring or echo, but I would love feedback on the recording quality. This is a converted closet. I have not yet added any foam or anything, so the sound is probably bouncing around quite a bit.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/booth_test.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Yup, definitely something going on there. It's quite eveident when listening on headphones. Kind of a hollow sound. I think it's phase cancellation from the reflections.

    Peer Feedback:

    yeah the space is too live. it definitely needs foam. if it's a closet and gluing foam might be an issue, use t-pins to hold the foam against the sheetrock. leaves small holes which can be caulked and painted.

    Peer Feedback:

    re: gluing foam

    I just did this in my closet, Mike. Instead of gluing foam to the walls, I glued them to white foamcore boards (like one would use for a science fair). I cut the boards to the size I wanted, attached string (I used a short strip of duct tape on both sides of the holes to reinforce and prevent the strings from ripping out), and then hung the panels where I wanted them with hook-style Command strips. If you cut the extra foamcore away so only foam shows, it looks pretty snazzy, too. For the ceiling, I still have a shelf with a clothes rod underneath, so I just jam one of the panels in between the shelf bottom and rod and that does the job (not as professional looking).

    On three of the panels, I attached hook-and-loop tape so that I can attach them together with a fourth propped on top for a portable vocal booth when I need it.

    It's working rather well! I bought the Auralex squares for something like $100-$125. They came with special glue in a caulking-type tube. I had two left over to stick under my monitors, so that's another problem solved. The foam boards were probably another 20 or 30. Command strips with hooks, about $15. I'm looking for a wall-to-wall remnant to put on the floor but just lay out a blanket for now.

    The setup is definitely not soundproof, but no one's complained about recording quality so I think it's absorbing quite well and the space is so small I don't have to worry about bass traps.

    I do miss the closet space.

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    Bowflex

    Script:

    Welcome to BowFlex, the recognized leading manufacturer of exercise equipment since 1989. Everyday, millions of people use our equipment to enrich their health and lifestyle…and we’re glad you’re one of them.

    Now, to help you lose weight, shape and tone your body, improve your cardiovascular health, increase your metabolism, and to help you look and feel your best, we're pleased to introduce you to the ‘BowFlex Criss-Cross Personal Gym’ DVD.

    This interactive DVD makes everything from assembly, maintenance, and usage a snap! It allows you to tailor your workouts to match your goals. It walks you through the assembly process step-by-step! It even contains software that you can download onto your own computer to keep detailed logs of your workouts!

    Ready? Great. Choose a chapter and join millions of other happy and fit people.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tonia's recording

    Two takes. Sorry if you have to adjust the volume on your monitors between takes--I could figure out how to normalize them after I'd done my other editing and gave up. :) Take 1: I tried to be smiley and upbeat. Take 2: I dropped into a lower register. What do you think when you compare the reads? I'm trying to work out my different voice personalities--ex. conversational tone vs. professional. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-31886/script-recording-59293.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonya. You managed to sound very easy and relaxed while keeping up the energy at the same time. I think the second recording was closer to the mic and so it sounded closer to me as I listened than the first one did. The only problem I really detected was that the ending was a little abrupt in the second recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tonia
    Great job! Love your voice, diction, acting choices. I think I preferred the first one - more conversational.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Ladies. We're staying with in-laws this week, and I brought a travel version of my equipment. It's been a bit of an eye-opener, actually. I'm using a desk mic stand and a desk that's too low (scrunches my neck), plus I'm sitting down, plus I'm feeling a little self-conscious, and I think that drained some of the energy from my read (I thought the first sounded low energy). It does make being natural a little easier, though, almost like standing up for the read gets me feeling too much in a performer frame of mind. I thought the first sounded more conversational and the second more my "professional" voice, although I was trying to sound conversational in both. Interesting how dropping into a lower register did that automatically.

    Weird how the ending gets cut off. That's an artifact of the Edge site (If you play it starting with only the last little bit, it doesn't get cut off.) I've noticed that reads uploaded without enough of a buffer at the start get cut off some, and now I know it does that on the other end, too!

    Thanks, again!

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    Bowling Tips

    Script:

    Throwing the perfect shot can lead to a higher bowling score; throwing lots of perfect shots can lead to a perfect game — a score of 300. To achieve a perfect hook shot:

    1. Straighten the wrist of your bowling hand. Your bowling hand, not surprisingly, is the one that’s holding the ball. Be careful not to bend or flex your wrist.

    2. Hold your hand straight while you swing the ball out and back.

    3. Begin to rotate the wrist, hand, and fingers on your bowling arm toward the opposite side of your body as the ball comes forward.

    4. Let go of the ball near your ankle and finish with your hand in the handshake position after you release the ball. You know your hand is in the handshake position when your thumb is pointing up and your palm is facing the inside of the lane.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear zoo.keepers's recording

    I'd appreciate your comments on this practice recording in preparation of a demo. All comments are welcome; the good, the bad, and the ugly. Now, let's go bowling!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106548/script-recording-98165.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation - good, I you sound like a bowling instructor and this appears to be educational script

    Vocal Performance - my suggestions - make it as smooth as you can. One trick is to pretend that you are talking to someone, rather than reading a script. Nit picky here 'throwing lots' could be practiced so that it is smoother. Also, I think that you overemphasize the word 'bend' or 'flex'. If you are not using a pop screen I suggest you get one.

    Recording quality - personally I would remove all breaths so that the read is absolutely clean, for me it is distracting to hear inhalations before each sentence.

    Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Alot of breaths and mouth noises.

    After you read each numbered list item, I like the way you pause for a moment so as to allow the listener to absorb what you said for just a moment before moving onto the next item on the list.

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    Business Builders

    Script:

    Welcome to Episode 8 - Executing Your Idea. So have you ever wondered how some people just get it all done? Well in this episode, we'll talk about the 4 steps that make it happen. When you're ready to begin, click episode 8 on your screen - ready?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Pyahdonequah's recording

    I have a lot of mouth clicks and I want them gone, how can I edit them out? Also, I have never done voiceover work before and am doing my first class in April - please be gentle!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-42683/script-recording-53111.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have a comment on the recording quality since I'm on my laptop and it has not the best speakers, lol. As far as performance, you sound a bit nervous (well, you did mention you haven't done VO before).

    Perhaps imagine you're, say, out to dinner with a pretty lady whom you sense thinks you are really handsome and witty. Maybe that will relax you for the read. I know it's an odd suggestion, but hey, whatever works, this is acting after all....

    Peer Feedback:

    Welcome. A good place to start is with emphasis/inflection. Some call it "hitting" or "punching" the words. As you preview the script, consider which words are key. Good writers use modifiers sparingly. Verbs are often key as well. Titles and brands are obviously important. Place a slight emphasis on these kinds of words. So, the title "Executing Your Idea" is important and, since it is the 8th episode, you might imagine that earlier episodes dealt with "Articulating Your Idea" or "Researching Your Idea", etc. If so, then executing is the unique word in the Episode 8 title and needs some emphasis. (So does the episode number -- 8) Do this by lifting the pitch slightly as you say "Executing" NOT by saying it louder. Another key word is the modifier "four". How many steps are there? Four steps, not three or five, so emphasize that word too. Etc. etc. This is just one of the fundamentals.

    In short, my suggestion is to mark your scripts and emphasize the key words a bit more than you did here. Good luck with your class and keep posting.

    Peer Feedback:

    Editing out mouth clicks is not an easy thing to do, especially if it is in the middle of a word or phrase. If they are in the clear, before and after, then it might be easier. It also depends on what software you're using.

    One thing that causes excessive mouth noise is completely closing your mouth before or after you take a breath. You get a little lip smacking. You may not notice it in normal conversation, but the mic betrays you. Try making a conscious effort to keep your mouth open when you finish a sentence and breathe to begin the next.

    Conventional wisdom is to keep hydrated. In my case, I feel it to be the exact opposite. I have excess salilva that causes the bottom of my tougue to click against my lower gum line. I just try to say the problematic word(s) over and over again in attempt to get my tongue to stop making that noise. It's like training any other muscle in your body. As far as the hydration issue goes. I have been told by some pros and read the same in a couple of books - that it takes 1 -1 1/2 hours for a drink of water to process through your body. So thinking that you can just alleviate the problem by immediately taking a drink is misleading. One (constantly) working voice talent I know makes sure that she drinks a 12 oz bottle of water at least an hour before she even goes to her audition at a recording studio.

    Are you using a pop screen? Some of those nioses can come from plosives (p's & b's, etc.).

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jenniferj_Burns's recording

    Look for overall comments and if you hear an echo please. This was not recorded in a home studio

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-89258/script-recording-88770.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi... I liked your voice. It was pleasant to listen to. Technical comment; in a few places the space between sentences seemed to be a bit too crowded together and sounded a little rushed. Personally, I also think the "feel" of the recording could have benefited with a tad more modulation in the tone / emotion of your voice. Looking forward to more!

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    C++ Developing an Application

    Script:

    From the Edge Studio Practice Script library:
    Developing an Application
    The application you'll create (called Myapp) is a subset of the VIEWEX sample application provided with the MFC samples. Myapp lets you open new child windows, each displaying an initial message, in a Multiple Document Interface (MDI) application. When you choose Change Text from the Text menu in Myapp, a dialog box opens and allows you to change the text of the message in the currently active child window.

    Myapp starts as a default application created by AppWizard. You'll add eight lines of code to this starter application to print a message when each new document window (MDI child window) is opened. Then, you'll create a dialog box for editing the message and add a menu command for opening the dialog box.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mr.GordonAndersen's recording

    I took the Investigate Voice Over class last month. I've since purchased a new mic and audio to digital converter box. This is my first recording. I value your feedback on both my performance, and my studio skills. This is a "raw" recording, no filters, no EQ, no splicing etc. Thank you for your time!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-120474/script-recording-93776.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't comment on the recording quality as I am listening on computer speakers.
    The read just doesn't capture me or sound like you are engaged in what you are saying. It is also a bit too choppy for me. Here is a good example of a how to video:
    http://worldwide.bose.com/productsupport/en_us/web/article_580_pairing_w...
    This video is smooth and engaging. It sounds like he wants you to easily learn how to synch to the speaker with blue tooth.
    The hardest part about VO is engaging the listener and not sound like you are just reading.
    Keep practicing and have fun!

    Peer Feedback:

    To me this sounded like what I would expect from a computer application webinar. I liked the phrasing and tonal accents. However, from what I am learning, clients today want it more personal so maybe trying a more "explaining it to a friend" approach would work better?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments. I'll record another take in order to incorporate your feedback. I'll focus more on the explain it to a friend, and engaged/bright sounds. I'll post it in the next few days. Thanks again for taking the time to listen and comment on my first recording!

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    Cheese

    Script:

    Oregon's Willamette Valley is one of the largest cheese growing regions in the country. Its mild climate, abundance of water and fertile soil provide ideal conditions for growing the cheetoh bushes which give us cheese.

    During the harvest season, migrant workers (mostly from Canada) pick the cheetos. Some of these are packaged and consumed raw, but the vast majority are transported to Tillamook, where they are refined into various kinds of cheese and shipped around the world from one of the west coast's major shipping ports in Tillamook Bay.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sundance kid's recording

    OK, a recording with mic #5. Two takes & call it good. Oh, and I caught the "nDuring..." but I'm too lazy to do it over :-) So is this too silly (errr, cheesy) to consider including on a demo?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/cheese.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sundance,
    Demo material? No. I'm expecting Masterpiece Theater not Tillamook cheese. You certainly could use it with another bed. It's just too regal for such a laid back delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    "Regal ceremonious theme with classical feel" - I needed something about :45 seconds in length, and this is what I had. But the whole production is sort of supposed to be one big non sequitur...

    But the question was semi-serious: is there room on a narration demo for a humorous piece or does it have to be all Masterpiece Theater/Discovery Channel?

    Peer Feedback:

    Absolutely, humor is displaying range and I think is a big plus.. A piece though that tries to bridge both is risky at best. Your audience are going to be quick studies. If your delivery doesn't deliver the goods in an obvious way your dead in the water and on your way to the circular files.

    Peer Feedback:

    45 seconds may be a bit too long for one spot, even for a narration demo. Humor and the tongue-in-cheekness is probably fine, but then you really have to go for it. The dry delivery with the regal sounding music sounds a bit incongruous here. That's not to say that it is in all situations. If you're married to the music, broaden the vocal quality and make it similarly regal. Then the "funny" is taken care of with the text. Conversely, if you're married to the laid back read, select a bed that supports the humor of the copy - which could be cut down, re-written and/or re-worked to tighten up the joke.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hang on guys! I think there has been a bit of a misunderstanding here...

    First, I will not be producing my own demo, so this in no way represents an attempt at a finished, demo-ready production clip. This one is posted for fun. The dissonance is intentional, but not indicative of how it would be produced if it were to be included in a demo. The question was merely whether the _script_ was suitable (with appropriate direction and production provided by a professional). And reading my notes from when I posted the clip, I can see that I didn't make that clear.

    I am in the process of trying to come up with potential scripts for a demo, and there is a certain sameness about the ones I've got so far, so I'm trying to find something to kind of break it up a bit. And yes, I'm aware that the full 45 seconds would not get included...

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed the performance in instantly got the humorous use of classical style music. There's a hilarious clip out there called the "F-Word" that uses classical music and the VO sounds like Larry King. Worth a listen if the word doesn't melt the cartilage in your ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    OK, I found that on YouTube. Reminds me of a linguistics professor I had in college - Wayne O'Neil. He gave pretty much that same lecture once, so I wonder if the creator of the clip had him as a professor as well. Seems he was frequently used as an expert witness in obscenity cases where the F word had been used. At the time (and this was quite a few years ago), he said he had never lost a case. But in his testimony, he would basically explain what is explained in the video...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rcooper1944's recording

    Pauses are for on line graphics of people and places.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2308/script-recording-22169.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation: slower and more drama. it sounds conversational. If that's what you're aiming for, cool.

    Vocal Performance: OK, some criticism ... words that end in "est" -- largest, earliest -- pronounce the "t". Be careful of "mouth noises" like those pesky clicks and little sounds we're not aware of until a mic picks it up. Eating slices of apple prior to recording can, interestingly enough, help with that.

    Recording quality: I understand that you created pauses for graphics, but make the pauses silent. No room or chair noise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Heard a little noise during the pauses towards the end of the read. But overall a nice read.

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    Cooking for Kids

    Script:

    Cooking is a great thing to start teaching kids at an early age. I grew up in family full of great cooks and chefs. Watching them prepare wonderful meals or just a good sandwich was always fun to me and developed my love for cooking.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear boxermom2000's recording

    Hi Gang, trying out a new DAW...also, having a little trouble with sibilance lately. Any suggestions? ~Laura

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-87511/script-recording-77529.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! And congrats on your win for the contest! :)

    For the sibilance, keep the tongue sharp and get on those tongue twisters! Do you do any for warm ups?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Laura:

    I don't think sibilance was too strong on this recording, so you must be working on it. I like the read very much, feels real, honest, and comfortable. Maybe a longer pause after "chefs" would be a good idea to separate the two sentences more clearly. It sounds like they run together, a bit confusing.

    The room sounds nice, not too dead, a little lively. Mic technique is spot on and the noise is low. Maybe the recording levels are a little bit low?

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    Creating Pivot Tables

    Script:

    The data that’s going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list, and must not have empty rows in it, nor empty columns. If you have any interim subtotals in there, get rid of them. Get rid of those empty rows. Click on any cell within here; Now on the Insert tab, go to the leftmost button -- many times you’ll simply click that button, then click okay.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback! Thanks so much!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked this read, Steph! You have clear emphasis and diction, you keep a nice pace to this technical copy, and there's a bit of a smile and tease I can hear in some of your instruction. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read - maybe a tad bit rushed for an instructional video. Your audience is going to be concentrating on following your instructions, so don't stress them out by dashing through the steps.

    It would be fun to pretend that there are visuals that accompany the steps, including some off-camera mouse clicking FX - which would really pace this read out in bite size pieces.

    Kind of like "The data that's going to be the source for your pivot table has to be organized as a list --
    , , - and must not have...." etc.

    just my 2c,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you are reading this a bit too fast like Dave said. Slow down the pace a bit and I think it will sound more natural. Not to say it didn't sound natural at all.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear danfishersvoice's recording

    I have auditioned with Voices.com 345 times over the last year and have earned one job. I talked to Lin and she told me I should be standing not sitting. She also recommended I have this check-up with you guys. I am clearly doing some things wrong...I know this is a competitive business...I just need a little help I think. I am using a CAD M179 microphone. Thanks, Dan Fisher

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-23251/script-recording-45893.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your tone is more suited for a documentary read. Maybe a more friendly intro, an excitement to share some information. The delivery didn't sound authentic to the copy. Also, be careful with pronunciation; Fibonacci was mispronounced the first time, and the 2nd time was hesitant.

    Peer Feedback:

    To my ears this didn't sound as conversational as the copy would suggest. I'm also hearing southern accent here and there (intended?)...

    Audio sounded fine to me. Not the greatest mic in the world, but you seem to do well with it.

    You do sound in this submission as though you could relax just a bit and improve the delivery. If the southern delivery isn't intended, it's definitely present and might need some ironing out. Most everyone on the forum is helpful as far as their ears and experience allows...hope this helped.

    Peer Feedback:

    I wonder... do you use your hands when speaking? If I had to guess, you didn't during this recording. I've found using your hands really gives you emphasis and dynamics you never knew you had. I never naturally use my hands when speaking in public so I had to teach myself how.

    Of course, if you already do, then maybe the posture of standing for the first time threw off your energy and kicked you out of 'the zone' a bit.

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    Demo Script

    Script:

    1.How crazy is this—over a hundred inches of snow here in Buffalo, NY. Winter is a wonderland where snowmobiles have replaced automobiles, and snow drifts cover front doors!

    2.Why in the richest democracy in the world are there over 9 million adults with serious mental illnesses while less than 2% can find a hospital with a psychiatric bed. America, WHY?

    3.Right this way folks to Miss Piggy’s Pork Farm and an unprecedented tour of the world’s best lip smackin’ ham, pork rinds, and “pig tales.”

    4.So, who uses words like musicians use notes? Voice Actors. They tell stories that record human life and teach generations how to live, and how to Love.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eagleye's recording

    Hello Randye: Last attempt, I promise until we have our first Skype next Tuesday, 7PM. This time when I read your feedback, and listened again to my read, I heard what you are said! OK, maybe this is a little thing, but a BIG one for me. I think this means my brain is starting to get it! Hopefully this attempt is an improvement!! Thanks for your help!! PS Hope your holidays are going well...

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    Peer Feedback:

    From your comment, I'm guessing that this was really only intended for Randye. There's a box to check when seeking Edge coach feedback/checkups that only sends your submission to them and not to the general Forum.

    However.

    Some questions: Are these scripts for a proposed demo? If so, what kind? It seems to be a mix of genres. The first one looks like a news cast or weather forecast, the second political, the third either a tour or commercial and last one E-learning or informational.

    By and large, they all sound like you are simply reading. There's little connection to the material or POV. I hear a lot of Edge Handbook "technique" (inflection, pitch modulation, emphasizing certain words, etc.). I understand the words that you are speaking and that they kind of form complete sentences, but feel little relation to what you're saying to me.

    Even though #1 & #2 are very different scripts, they sound pretty much the same - in dynamic range (pitch), vocal quality, inflection, pace, intensity, volume and energy.

    #3 - Not sure that Jim Henson's outfit would appreciate the implication that their beloved Miss Piggy is likened to tasty treats. Obviously a fictitious Pork Farm commercial or tour narration. A simple Google search lead me to a Miss Piggy Farm in Ashland, Virginia, but little information about it. If it was meant for comic effect, it missed the mark. (But it might not if you went really broad with it.) I love pork in nearly all it's various forms, but I do not see the appeal of voicing a tour/commercial of a pig butchering pork farm. Especially after the image of that famous muppet flashes through my mind.

    #4 - Kind of sounds like a children's story delivery. The L's on "live" and "love" were a little wonky. Sounded a little tongue-tied - kind of slapping in the bottom of your mouth.

    The last line of the copy says it all. However, these reads are far from being "storytelling" or "conversational", nor are they teaching me anything because I cannot relate to what is being said as human to human communication. They're just somewhat connected words mechanically read from a page.

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    Diabetes education

    Script:

    One way your body keeps sugar in target ranges is with a hormone called insulin. Think of insulin as a special key. This key unlocks doors in different cells so that the cells can use or store sugar. As Type 2 diabetes progresses, your body does not produce enough insulin to balance sugar levels. In other words, there are not enough keys to open doors that allow your body to use or store sugar. Also, your body does not use insulin as well as it used to. This means that some doors don’t recognize the keys, which keeps sugar in the body longer. And . . . Lastly, your body maintains too much sugar when it doesn’t need it.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear LisaFeltes's recording

    This was an audition I did recently on a p2p. Would like some feedback on style, pacing and intonation please. Also, still working on the editing process. Advice welcome! Thanks in advance.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your mastering volume is very low. Do you know what your peak dB is? It should be between -6dB and -3dB.

    Generally, the pace may be just a bit brisk. With such heady subject matter, your listener needs time to hear, understand and absorb the information coming at them, especially if they know little to nothing about it, which is always a good assumption. However, the general quality of the read if good.

    A couple of noise things. A big click after "insulin" at the end of the first sentence - probably something that could be cleanly snipped out. Same thing after "sugar" at the end of the third sentence.

    The breath sound could have been snipped out after "progresses". Same with the next couple breaths. It kind of sounds like you used a de-breather or noise gate, because the breath sounds don't sound "natural" - more like "catch breaths", a slight pause, then into the next part.

    There seem to be the same kind of sounds - clicks or cut off catch breath - at nearly every comma and period throughout the rest of the recording.

    Most, but not all, S sounds are a little sharp, just a touch sibilant. Not uncommon in the female voice. Discovering where in your vocal frequency range those S's occur and attenuating the EQ just a touch will probably do the trick. A de-esser basically does the same thing.

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    Disciplining Children -- How to Video

    Script:

    If you’re going to get back in charge at your house as soon as this tape is over, exactly how are you going to do it? We’ll take you through it step by step… It works and it’s easier than you think. Now … let’s look a few examples of how to use these behavior tactics with three problems that often drive parents nuts: Cleaning rooms … eating … and going to bed.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tonia's recording

    Just a quick one without edits. Trying to keep momentum forward... Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice and manner were very relaxed in this read. The tempo was slow, which, in my opinion is appropriate for this read. You came across as a caring, nonjudgmental helper for parents with problems. Your enunciation was also clear without being overdone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, I thought it was a clear and concise reading. The tone came across as natural to me. The only thing that might be considered was the first few words of the first sentence. It seemed a little choppy to me and the words "back" and "charge" were hit very hard. The first few words didn't flow with the remainder of the read to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the comments and help, Chris and CLCoop. Appreciate it!

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    I think my favorite part of this read is the lighter, reassuring tone of "We'll take you through it..." after the first sentence. Very clear, very natural, and very well recorded.

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    Disease Management

    Script:

    Welcome to the module
    Concepts of Disease Management
    Disease management shifts the focus of healthcare from managing individual interventions and their costs, to managing a disease as a whole.
    This module examines four concepts crucial to most disease management systems: a focus on the disease rather than individual episodes, integration of healthcare settings, value-based reimbursement, and continuous clinical evaluation and feedback.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Waltonia's recording

    An audition from last month. There was no direction on the posting except that it's for an E-Learning module on disease management.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! Nice pacing at the beginning. Seemed to speed up just a tad in the second half, but the spacing between list items is still adequate. Hope you get the gig!

    Peer Feedback:

    Not all that much up on E-Learning and/or the requirements for the audition process. But, just guessing, the client would probably want to hear something close to a finished, produced product - which means editing out breaths, among other things. I heard at least 3 breaths. There seemed to be one edited out after "systems" - which was a pretty hard edit, sounding more like a noise gate because the end of the word was clipped off ever-so-slightly.

    Generally, IMHO, it needs to slow down just a touch, especially if it is going to be linked up with video or a PowerPoint presentation. The listener needs time to digest the concepts.

    The vocal is pleasant and easy to listen to. This kind of stuff is pretty "dry" by nature, so you might think about personalizing it a little - talking one-on-one to a specific listener rather than thinking of teaching the masses. You want to reach one individual at a time, even though it's designed for a broader audience.

    Recording quality seems pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent feedback, guys. Thanks. I did not get this job, but I have a credit here for feedback, so I thought I'd use the audition file. Yeah, I think slowing down is a good idea for the E-Learning thing. As you say, James, the old "one-on-one imagined specific listener" method does always make my reads somehow more natural. It's hard for me, but it works. Gotta keep working on that.
    I left a few breaths in, but attenuated them (got that method from you, James) because I thought e-learning might be okay with some of that. Still, you weren't supposed to noticed the edited segments--I'll have to work on that.
    Thanks again Tom and James.
    And 12 + 4 = it doesn't take much to be a human these days, but good to see Edge is on it!

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're interested in E-Learning, you should research the trends. Listen to examples. For instance, breath sounds are perfectly fine and natural for audiobooks (even encouraged for realism), but even for long form narration like documentaries and even web based material, you'll (almost) never hear a breath sound. But the spacing and pacing are such that you really don't notice that they're missing. On the other hand, when listening to hours and hours of an audiobook with headphones or earbuds, if the listener's brain doesn't hear or detect the hint of a breath or an actual breath sound, psychologically, the listener's mind gasps for breath and becomes anxious without consciously knowing why. Because it's a "naked" experience - no visuals, no music, no sound FX. The listener expects that someone talking to them that intimately is going to breathe because that's what happens in real life.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good point. I'll have to bone up on my genres of VO more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Randye! Good feedback to move forward with.

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    Dish Net DVR

    Script:

    Congratulations! Welcome to the exciting world of Dish Network DVR. We have designed this ‘quick tips video’ to help you get the most out of your Dish Player DVR. And at the end of this video, you’ll be able to: pause live TV for up to 2 hours, skip commercials in recorded or paused programming, create your own instant replays by skipping back, fast forward to get to the good parts of your shows, reverse record live TV to watch scenes again, and record your favorite TV shows and movies.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear JasonArnold's recording

    Trying to add more 'life' to my recordings. Thanks for the feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    A very articulate read. I would work on sounding more natural (conversational), like you're telling a buddy about the cool things he can do with his new DVR.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good to me Jason. Nicely paced and good navigation through the "list" using specific choices. If I were to be nit-picky, I would say in the line "...to help you get the most..." the phrasing break between the words "you" and "get" sounds a little odd to my ear. Other than that I thought it was a good pass.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bringing "life" doesn't necessarily mean to "force" points on the listener. The entire delivery sounds a little "put on" and exaggerated, like you're making an effort to goose it up rather than letting it happen organically.

    So. Who are you talking to? Not a "general" who but a "specific" who.

    For instance, on one of my recent trips to Costco, a very nice young woman engaged me in a "conversation" about switching from my cable company to DirecTV. She didn't single me out like a carnival barker, but simply made eye contact and "engaged" me. And she didn't try to "sell" me. She merely laid out the compare/contrast for me. It was a "pitch" she had obviously been trained to give, but it was delivered in a friendly and disarming way.
    I signed up, got home and my wife put the kibosh on the whole thing. We're still with the cable company.

    That's what's missing here. I don't feel like you're talking so much "to" me as "at" me.

    The overall volume is rather low and there is some room echo.

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    Dish Net DVR

    Script:

    Congratulations! Welcome to the exciting world of Dish Network DVR. We have designed this ‘quick tips video’ to help you get the most out of your Dish Player DVR. And at the end of this video, you’ll be able to: pause live TV for up to 2 hours, skip commercials in recorded or paused programming, create your own instant replays by skipping back, fast forward to get to the good parts of your shows, reverse record live TV to watch scenes again, and record your favorite TV shows and movies.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear my edits? How is my performance?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds genuine.

    You have a different audio level on one of your above recordings.
    Is that on purpose?

    What recording software program are you using?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you slaucoin. I recorded the scripts and the next day I could not remember if I normalized the tracks. One of the three takes I normalized and I think I had already normalized so I had a big concern. I bounced them to disk and took my chances. I am using ProTools.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    I am gathering a variety of narrative scripts for audio books, eLearning, etc...that I plan to use with future coaching through Edge. I think this would work for eLearning. Plus, while I await for my Audacity course to begin, I am playing around with some minor editing techniques. I am also still trying to find my sweet spot with my mic. Of the previous pieces I have posted, I hope this one demonstrates a sense of growth in my vocal performance and quality of recording.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Yes, yes, yes. Definitely headed in the right direction. The vocal quality and level (volume) of the delivery was quite good as well - more intimate and not trying to reach for the upper mezzanine. Sound quality is really good. Once you cover and get a grasp of FX processing with Larry (NR, EQ, compression, etc.) You'll be good to go.

    The pacing was really quite good. And you captured the tone and character of the piece intended by the author quite effectively. It held interest and coaxed the listener to want to hear more. Very instructive and interesting - as if these revelations were being presented for the first time. I felt that I (as a single listener) was being "talked to" by a friend instead of being "talked at" by a disembodied voice.

    With the exception of the tag - "To expand your vision..." to the end seemed disjointed from the overall tone, rhythm, messaging and sound quality from the rest of the piece. I can only guess, but it seemed that it was recorded a bit separated in time from the rest - like you took a break and came back to it or something. One way to help keep that from happening is to play back the last few sentences and talk along with them to get back into the rhythm and general feel of what came before. (ADDENDUM) On the other hand, after listening a few more times, it seems to be more of an instruction than a continuation of the narrative. In which case, set it off with a little space (see below).

    One thing I learned from one of the engineers who occasionally works at Audible Studios is about timing the silences (room tone). 1/2 - 1 second before the recording begins. (Yours here was nearly 7 seconds.) 3.5 - 4 seconds from the title/author/slate to "Forward" or "Chapter One/Chapter Title". 2 - 2.5 seconds from "Chapter One/Chapter Title" into the body of the text. 3.5 seconds at the end of a chapter (which means with the other 1/2 - 1 second at the beginning, there is actually 4 - 4.5 seconds between chapters). And 1.5 - 2 seconds in between sections within a chapter (white space on the page). Those are general guidelines that Audible engineers go by.

    Now for the downside: Right from the top - "I go outside..." Those three words got a little smushed together. Here's one thing that I learned from Barbara Rosenblat. Ease into the beginning of a book (or chapter) with just a touch slower pace than when you get rolling with the story or narrative. The same for the end. Slow a bit to give it that "period" or "button" of finality before continuing on to the next chapter. Same idea at the end of the book - wrap the story up, even it lends itself toward a continuation or sequel.

    Overall, some very good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    So glad you were able to hear some improvements! That last section was recorded separately and I was way to energized! Instead of recording it over again I wanted to play around with the envelope tool and compress the pitch down. But it was sloppy. Larry's class can't start soon enough for me! I've been reading Barbara's book and I made note on finding my sweet spot on the mic, and having a "button" at end of a moment (that is an acting term too!!), which I applied to tgectrabsitions within the selection as it shifts around in ideas. But, I didn't note the slower start tip I do feel like I jump out of the gate too fast. Going to make note of the recording pauses too. I made it longer at beginning because I was trying the 5 second noise level recording but I guess I should have cut it back to 3 secs once I did the noise reduction. Thank you James! As always I really appreciate your great notes!

    Peer Feedback:

    Vast improvement!

    That "slow start" tip may not be in Barbara's book. I got that tip from her in as seminar she conducted at the SAG VO Lab in NYC. I've listened to the audiobook version of her book several times. A really nice lady.

    Use that 5 seconds of room tone for your NR and to fill in the spaces for editing. But cut the beginning back to .5 sec. to 1 sec. Waiting longer than that might give the listener that "Is this thing ever going to start?" kind of feeling. And the 4 - 4.5 sec. between chapters follows along with CD music production - CD tracks are usually separated by 4 sec.

    I'm sure that the light bulbs will be bursting to life in your brain and those "AHA!" moments will pile up as you go through Larry's class. Be diligent and do your homework!

    A word on the "pitch" tool. It's a delicate thing. Going even a titch too far in either direction can cause sonic artifacts in your voice recording. Best to stay away from it, IMHO.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear redhedgentry@msn.com's recording

    Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated : )

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    Peer Feedback:

    Some good stuff in here. I admire your confidence in speaking so slowly and deliberately--we listen because you really do go about telling us what to do. But I'll bet you could sell the benefits (minimize lines, rosy glow) a bit more enthusiastically without throwing the rest of the read off.

    There are two instances where your pitch rises and makes it sound misleadingly as if the words were the start of a list, on "face" and "fingers."

    I'm hearing a lot of what I'm pretty sure is mouth noise in this and other recordings you've posted. Please don't let it slow the rest of your work down, but you should probably figure out how to minimize or get rid of it. (Wish I could tell you how, 'cause then I'd go fix my own!)

    Peer Feedback:

    That is GREAT feedback. Thank-you!

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    E-Learning Web-Series for Business Builders

    Script:

    Welcome to episode 8 -- Executing Your Idea. So, have you ever wondered how some people just get it all done? Well in this episode, we'll talk about the 4 steps that make it happen. When you're ready to begin, click "episode 8" on your screen. Ready?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SteveP's recording

    Trying my hand (or lips, as the case may be) at some e-learning scripts. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice overall rich vocal sound and recording quality. There's a whistle on the "F" of 4 steps.

    - touzet -

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, friendly sound, Steve. Very conversational. I agree with Touzet, there was something off with the "f" on the four steps. Otherwise, I really liked it!
    ~Laura

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear pmcondon's recording

    The following recording was recorded in my newly finished home studio that I built myself using professional equipment. I would like to know how I could of won the script contest with this audition.

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    Peer Feedback:

    How you could have won that contest with this audition?

    You couldn't. LarryBoy's was excellent. To improve this submission, you'd need to read it more smoothly...take out the choppy delivery. You'd need to remove the breathing and the mouth noise. You'd need to deliver it more conversationally. This sounded like a salesman.

    The vocal also sounds over processed.

    You asked....

    Peer Feedback:

    The tone of you voice is great. I would work on smoothing out the read.Feel yourself really talking to someone and not at someone. As of the recording goes, It sounds a little over processed.Perhaps pull off the mic a bit. If your standing at six inches try standing at 8 inches and bring the gain up a titch if you need to. Hope this helps out.

    Peer Feedback:

    Huh!! Could have saved the $27!

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom needs to start charging for his critiques. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I think the recording quality was good, but the read did sound a bit choppy.
    I did the same recording for the contest.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear peter.oneillca's recording

    In addition to commercial/promotional, I am also interested in e-learning narration and/or audiobook. Any thoughts on this one? Thanks all.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice, friendly tone but, there's a lot of reverb in this recording. Move closer to the mic. Also, heard a lot breaths when you were pausing.

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    Electricity

    Script:

    Electricity
    Electricity has become the most important source of energy in the world, yet no one has ever seen an electrical charge, and until this century, it was impossible to isolate and study individual charges of electricity. Electricity is a natural phenomenon that comes about because of the negatively and positively charged particles of matter. These particles are tiny parts of atoms, called protons and electrons. When a substance is in its normal state, the charges on these particles are more or less in balance. The natural arrangement of protons and electrons in a substance is a disorganized one. However, when something changes the material -- something as simple as vibration, friction, heat, or being close to another substance –

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear my edits? How is my performance?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina! I enjoyed your read. Very natural and easy to listen to. The read sounds seamless, but I can definitely hear the edits. The vocals between sentences--especially at the beginning--sound too close together to convince my ears that you were breathing anywhere in there. It left me feeling like it was heavily edited. Overall though, I enjoyed hearing you. Thanks for sharing! Joe Redd

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    Electricity

    Script:

    Electricity
    Electricity has become the most important source of energy in the world, yet no one has ever seen an electrical charge, and until this century, it was impossible to isolate and study individual charges of electricity. Electricity is a natural phenomenon that comes about because of the negatively and positively charged particles of matter. These particles are tiny parts of atoms, called protons and electrons. When a substance is in its normal state, the charges on these particles are more or less in balance. The natural arrangement of protons and electrons in a substance is a disorganized one. However, when something changes the material -- something as simple as vibration, friction, heat, or being close to another substance –

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sreagor's recording

    OK, coach, I am back in the saddle. I know, I know. I skipped "source of" der. Don't know how I missed that one!

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    Peer Feedback:

    The read was good. It held my attention, you articulated and inflected the important bits well. I'll compare when I get home on some studio Cans and report back later....Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Nodo. I'm just starting out so I appreciate everyone's feedback.

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    Ellis Island

    Script:

    Ellis Island

    From 1892 to 1954, over twelve million immigrants entered the United States through the portal of Ellis Island, a small island in New York Harbor. Ellis Island is located in the upper bay just off the New Jersey coast, within the shadow of the Statue of Liberty. Through the years, this gateway to the new world was enlarged from its original 3.3 acres to 27.5 acres by landfill supposedly obtained from the ballast of ships, excess earth from the construction of the New York City subway system and elsewhere.

    Before being designated as the site of one of the first Federal immigration station by President Benjamin Harrison in 1890, Ellis Island had a varied history. The local Indian tribes had called it "Kioshk" or Gull Island. Due to its rich and abundant oyster beds and plentiful and profitable shad runs, it was known as Oyster Island for many generations during the Dutch and English colonial periods. By the time Samuel Ellis became the island's private owner in the 1770's, the island had been called Kioshk, Oyster, Dyre, Bucking and Anderson's Island. In this way, Ellis Island developed from a sandy island that barely rose above the high tide mark, into a hanging site for pirates, a harbor fort, ammunition and ordinance depot named Fort Gibson, and finally into an immigration station.

    From 1794 to 1890 (pre-immigration station period), Ellis Island played a mostly uneventful but still important military role in United States history. When the British occupied New York City during the duration of the Revolutionary War, its large and powerful naval fleet was able to sail unimpeded directly into New York Harbor. Therefore, it was deemed critical by the United States Government that a series of coastal fortifications in New York Harbor be constructed just prior to the War of 1812.

    After much legal haggling over ownership of the island, the Federal government purchased Ellis Island from New York State in 1808. Ellis Island was approved as a site for fortifications and on it was constructed a parapet for three tiers of circular guns, making the island part of the new harbor defense system that included Castle Clinton at the Battery, Castle Williams on Governor's Island, Fort Wood on Bedloe's Island and two earthworks forts at the entrance to New York Harbor at the Verrazano Narrows. The fort at Ellis Island was named Fort Gibson in honor of a brave officer killed during the War of 1812.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    Very much in the just getting started phase but thought I'd try a longer narrative work, would appreciate any comments on the delivery or the recording quality (Snowball USB mike).

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    Peer Feedback:

    rich pipes.

    some of the words get lost in the speed of your delivery.

    As a fellow "basement-voice" guy, I had to learn to increase my range to make certain long pieces sound interesting, especially historical narratives.

    What I would suggest is to put more "smile" in your delivery. Literally, "smile" and "lift your eyebrows" as you do the piece. Ever seen Broadway guys deliver their lines? They 'smile" and 'lift'. I have NO idea why that works, but it sure works for me.

    Regarding recording quality, It's quite clear, I just hear the "room tone" in the signal.
    If you're unable to work in a padded room, this may help.

    http://www.harlanhogan.com/portaboothArticle.shtml

    Keep pushing ever onward!

    Wolf

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, I could tell that this is a straight through read, with no editing at all. I can hear the breaths and everything. And that's not a bad thing, because it shows that you're an excellent reader. The mic doesn't sound bad at all either and your delivery is calm, confident and authoritative. I would say to just try to work on making this sound more like you're relating it to someone and not just reading it.

    I think a good voice and being able to read well are great, but as you know, in order to hold an audience's attention for any length, one needs to engage them by making them feel a part of the story. To do that, you'll want to put more warmth into a read like this, color some words, make the story come to life. I think you have the raw skills for a promising career in VO. The only thing to do now is develop the other skills necessary to succeed. All the best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Basically quite interesting. You voice is all over the place. At the end you lost
    the "barrel-gravel" you started with. Seems you can't make a decision about that.

    Peer Feedback:

    Appreciate the feedback. It appears my issues are the whole "warmth" thing, extending my range, and control. Have yet to get coaching so I guess that's the next step. Thanks again, appreciate the listen as I know it's a long piece compared to the others on the site.

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    esl

    Script:

    Hi. I am Marianne / Marcel. Let’s repeat some sentences:

    I live in a big city. I am married. I do not have any children. I work in an office.

    Good! Now, let’s repeat these sentences once again, but more quickly this time

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dalekay's recording

    I am very new and considering voice over as a new career. I am wondering if I have potential and what I should work on.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Dale. Welcome to the Site. You have a good voice but if I as a newbie would chose a script for an introductory post I would find one which showcases my natural speaking voice/accent that would give the listener more material to make a critical judgement. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great work! I don't know the ins and outs of ESL voice-over, but the pacing seemed right, and the conversational sentences sounded conversational. I hear what might be a little room echo, but recording quality is pretty great for starting out.

    Welcome to the forum.

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dale,

    Welcome to the forum, with you the best of luck with your new journey!

    You do have a very nice voice, and I too, thought that your pacing was pretty good. Keep up the great work! Oh, if you need an inexpensive idea for a booth, you can visit my youtube page, just type in "Healthyful" My New Portable Vocal Booth. Hope that helps!!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Dale,
    This was really good for a first read! Heavy on the enunciation, but for an ESL script, that would likely be called for.

    The recording quality was not bad at all, either. I do highly recommend checking out Carol's portable booth video. I thought it was really well done and works great!

    Best of luck to ya!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dale, good job especially for someone just starting out. If i were to give you any advice i would just say you might want to slow down a little bit between the sentences that our suppose to be repeated. Otherwise Keep up the good work

    Peer Feedback:

    Release the over-articulation. Read it conversationally as if you were actually speaking to a person. Truthfully, this was WAY too harsh in the diction/articulation department. Forgivable in a new poster. But don't concentrate so much on hitting every syllable and you can bring a more natural read to your mic.

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    eSuicideTalk

    Script:

    eSuicideTalk will help you understand suicide better and become more aware of it. Through this program you will learn about things that you can do to help prevent suicide in your community. For many people, participating in a program about suicide can also be personal....you might be worried for someone you care about, or concerned about your own risk of suicide. In this program, we’ll explore the question, “How do we talk about suicide?"

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Steph Minervino's recording

    I appreciate any feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111445/script-recording-99707.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your voice for this! This is a great read, my only advice is to enunciate a little more. Practice hitting those T's and D's and other stops at the ends of words without it sounding too forced. I know people don't talk like that in real life conversations, but in VO it's very important. Also, I love the tone of your voice, how sympathetic you sound. However, toward the end it almost sounded TOO sympathetic to the point where your voice started to quiver a little. Keep that tone, because it is a serious read, but maybe make it more matter-of-fact so you don't get too invested in the seriousness of it. Hope this helps!

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    Excerpt from Phone Operation Instructions Script

    Script:

    That’s the basic over-view of the common functions you’ll use with the phone system. Now let’s walk you through the different buttons but most of them will be pretty familiar to you. We have the speaker button down here in the corner next to the mute button. Over to the left we have the volume control. You’ll notice that if the receiver is on the cradle, or hung up

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Geldy7's recording

    I'm VERY new to formal voice-over training. I've just signed up for my training with Edge but in the meantime I am a Coporate Trainer for a tile and stone distributor and am developing training videos for use on our training website. What is driving me CRAZY is the breaths I seem to struggle eliminating from my recordings. You'll notice in this 20 second clip I take some noticable breaths. Any tips for eliminating those or does that just come with experience in controlling your breathing while recording? ANY FEEDBACK is appreciate by this up and comer in the industry. THANKS!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4627/script-recording-35883.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, very nice tone; has that "person next door" vibe to it.
    EQing is nice as well.

    I am new to this but have been critiqued about tempo- so I'll say it is a tad fast: first sentence seems a little choppy-let the information"absorb" before moving on.

    Watch out in editiing stages: breathing and room ambience can be heard.

    I think in a very short time you will be there.

    Peer Feedback:

    Possibly a bit fast at the start..but you settled down. I could see it on a video. The breathing is something you will develop the more practice you do...exercises, exercises etc etc...

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    Excerpt from Phone Operation Instructions Script

    Script:

    That’s the basic over-view of the common functions you’ll use with the phone system. Now let’s walk you through the different buttons but most of them will be pretty familiar to you. We have the speaker button down here in the corner next to the mute button. Over to the left we have the volume control. You’ll notice that if the receiver is on the cradle, or hung up

    35 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Andre Hughes's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-42270/script-recording-53850.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Mr Hughes
    Something is really wrong with the recording quality, the first 7 second is missing. Hard to give you advice on performance like this.
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is way off on the read. I stopped at "let's walk you through the different buttons" due to the sound. In that short listen, I heard a definite 'urban' sound that can and can't work for you. If you're shooting for neutral, you'll want to work on that.

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    Facebook Etiquette

    Script:

    Hey Facebook users – uh, here are a couple of suggestions if you're over the age of nine…

    Some people have this idea that the number of "friends" you have on Facebook is a status of your popularity in real life. That may be true if these "friends" are people whom you know offline, and not strangers whom you randomly add while browsing through the Facebook network. But, hey, go ahead and let everyone know that you have 2300 "friends." That's sure to convince people that you're really popular.

    Secondly, no one cares what you ate last night unless Oprah's personal chef cooked it or a naked Kardashian served it to you personally. Stop posting about your wonderful dinner at the Olive Garden, because the only person who wants to hear about it is Olive Garden's customer service. We all understand that your dinner was one of the best of your life, but let's face it: we'd rather look at pictures of babies and kittens than hear about your Fettucini Alfredo.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Patrick Kamler's recording

    Wanted to cut loose and have a little fun with a script. Any and all comments welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Facebook Users.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Patrick,

    You also have a nice voice too! I heard a lot of breaths, can you edit them out? Also watch out for your volume, sometimes I heard it get louder. Were you moving in and out from your mic? You may have to work on your breath control, this was a lengthy script and it took me a while to learn how to breath properly. I noticed that I am not editing out a too many breaths these days. You will get it, keep practicing and you should google "Belly Breathing" it will train you to be able to use your breath the right way and give your body more oxygen, : )

    Keep on Truckin, you will get there!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Conversational tone was pretty good. it seemed pretty smooth. watch out for getting a little singsongy. a couple lines starting edging that way: "2300 friends", "wonderful dinner at the Olive Garden"….I get that you're going for tongue-in-cheek, but maybe go a little more wry with it.

    Dude, the breaths were beyond distracting. wow. please edit those out.

    I do like the conversational tone. it's not easy to pull off.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice read but I think you could have more fun with the read. It felt like you were holding back a bit. I loved the way you read the first few sentences felt like you were talking to me but the rest felt like you were being safe. I recommend going the extra mile and really cut loose you'll have more fun to.

    Peer Feedback:

    I heard all of the things others have mentioned in this recording but I'm sure they're all fairly easily resolved even if it takes some time to break old habits. Good luck on your voice work and I look forward to hearing more recordings from you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oh,my! I love this copy! Because I HATE facebook! I really want to take a stab at this one! (Are those enough exclamation points?!)

    (This sounds like a Jerry Seinfeld or Louis Black routine. Where did you get the copy?)

    Like Carol and Dave mentioned, the breaths are really distracting. You may not have to edit all of them out, but there are just a few too many. You might also minimize the volume of the ones you keep in.

    And to Carol's comment about the volume fluctuation - Do you use compression? That might even it out some.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto the sentiment about Facebook. Nice read. The material is such that I can see the opportunity to elicit numerous interpretations all of which would be appropriate to the material. No slight on yours. Well done. I'll be interested to see what others do with it. Great read, great script.

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    Final Quiz

    Script:

    Final Quiz -Welcome to the Final Quiz section. This quiz has ten questions. Select the best answer for each question and click Submit. The passing score is 8 correct answers. At the end of the quiz, your score will be displayed. Good Luck. Click Start to begin.

    33 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Happy New Year! First, Thanks to jamesromic who gave me the 411 on how to delete a file. If it is a paid job, you can't post the script (I have permission). 2013 was great and goals for 2014 are more commercial and more e-learning. This was the last of close to 48 "scripts" or files. Each one ran from a sentence or 2 to 5 paragraphs. Tone of voice must be consistent throughout, no tonal changes from file to file, so a lot of comparing. It's technically challenging and you really have to be organized. :) So I humbly offer this sample to the masses! It's been a while I recorded this with an AT 875 short bodied shotgun into a WA 12 preamp. NS1@10% and a very cool limiter by fabfilter. All comments welcome, drop a line! TedVoInSpain

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-65824.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds really good to me Ted! Nice up tone, conversational and personal delivery. Really good read. Javi told me you were doing quite well over there! Great to hear.

    Sound is really good too. Nice to see something new from you. But as busy as you've been, WORKING, it's better to know that you're getting the work.

    Peer Feedback:

    You're welcome, Ted. It seems that you can edit your critiques, but not the your own posted recording or comment. But I get into a bind there too. You can edit the body of your critique, but if you need to play the recording again for reference, it's not there and neither are the critiques from others (if there were any). So, I have to open another browser window to access the forum for that. I mentioned these glitches to David Goldberg. He told me that the website is going to be revamped soon. That was quite a while ago.

    Peer Feedback:

    They were 're-designing the website' about 2 years ago. Drupal is beeyotch in a lot of ways and that's what they've got the website designed through.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good Ted. Nice Job, I looked for you on Skype a little while back, right after hearing from you. Hope this finds you well. Keep up the great work,, hope to join you in the working world some day.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ted, I really liked the up tone too. But "Final Quiz" was a little high pitch to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ted, really great work!, Wonderful vocal quality, clear & crisp enunciation. Hope to also join you in the V/O working world.

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.
    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

    31 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Brian C. Topping's recording

    I would be grateful for all feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2061/script-recording-25848.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice tone and good voice for this piece. Maybe a little more emotion needed for the line: your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Overall, very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    love the tone of your voice, some of the read was very good and conversational, some of it sounded kind of choppy, like it was being read. it seemed to go back and forth between the two a few times. maybe a little over-articulation in some spots IMO.
    like andy said, maybe just a bit more emotion would fix it.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you could make the delivery a little more conversational, it would flow better. It feels mechanical in much of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi BT. I really like your voice. It sounds confident, and great tone. (and, I like the topic being read). I hear hints of an East Coast accent, maybe NY. That's great, I think you should use it more.

    I agree on the flow being more conversational. and with the comment about choppiness.

    I felt like you were reading the piece, instead of narrating a pleasurable video about fly-fishing. I personally think that one can ditch some of the strict diction when the topic is conversational and leisurely. During classes, I get called out on using too much diction all the time ("you sound like you're on NPR"), and am trying to attenuate it somewhat -- so I speak from experience.

    I think some of the choppiness and breaths could simply be edited out, instead of retakes.

    I hope I'm not coming off as too critical. "Those who can, do; those who can't, give copious free advice.."

    I look forward to your next reads.

    DS.

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.
    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12286/script-recording-31424.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy TJ,

    Your voice is a good fit for this type of material, but you sound like you are reading it. Pretend you are speaking to an old friend, and describing the joys of your favorite hobby...?

    Also, you do not reflect any of the happiness or joy of the piece. Perhaps try putting a little smile on your face as you read this (you'd be amazed. It works!)

    I hope that this helps. You have a good voice for this, keep plugging!

    Regards,

    Steve O'Sullivan

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    Fly Fishing

    Script:

    You are about to start a lifetime trip to a world of discovery. Through fly fishing, you will learn to see creatures invisible to other people. You will discover a new world of literature, new friends, new places - far flung and near at hand, and all interesting.

    The fly rod is an extraordinary fishing tool, enabling you to catch fish when other anglers cannot. Once you learn the rhythm of the rod, however, simply fishing with it may become more gratifying than catching with it. The rhythm of the rod carries your body, mind, and spirit to the water. Whether you catch a fish or not, the water will always give you a little of its strength, some of its energy, and much of its peace. As you fall asleep after a day of fly fishing, you can feel the rhythm of the rod and of the water.

    22 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstanton1953's recording

    My second pass at this script.Trying to be a bit brighter and more conversational than the first take. Critiques? Bring it on!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12286/script-recording-31780.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! Where is my fly rod...where?
    The copy was good.
    Recording quality - your voice was too low. This is about outdoor adventure, fishing on the water, etc.
    Vocal performance - was like someone doing a meditation and relaxation read. I would like to hear more emotion and inflection to capture the excitement of that activity.

    Peer Feedback:

    I too would liike to hear a little more emotion. I also think you need to get a bit closer to the microphone, it sounded a little distant. Try it again and repost.

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    Forcing entry

    Script:

    The "interior attack" is one of the most effective fire ground tactics! But to succeed,
    it means getting inside the building fast! This frequently neans forcing entry, using a flathead axe, into a structure where access is locked, blocked or non-existent.

    While prying doors is still an important skill that every fire-fighter must master,
    the alarming rise in crime in this country, combined with advance lock technology and
    increased security consciousnes, has made prying tactics slower and less effective.

    74 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    This is a significant departure from "Grace." it is an instructional only for fire-fighters.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6638/script-recording-32524.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Okay, Henry, here's my take on the piece.

    The read itself did not seem to match the piece given. Your overall tone seemed to be more suited for a documentary piece instead of a narration piece that seems to come from a training piece.

    The recording quality also seemed somewhat poor as it made your voice seemed muddled and distorted, to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sorry, don't make sense of your comment. Recording seems clear. You didn't mean the read was not matched to the script? You meant you didn't think the read worked.
    You indicated confusion as to whether this was a documentary or narration instead of a training piece. I'll accept that as a comment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Another question. What are you using for speakers? Maybe your sound is muddled.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your serious tone for this serious subject, a life-and-death one. Your phrasing sounded good to me, pauses where called for but otherwise not. Good example of this is the line "This frequently means forcing entry..." You have the voice of one who has a lifetime of experiences and, therefore, credibility. Good sound quality from my monitors.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bill, you got to me. That's exactly what I was after. Fire-fighting is the nastiest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that does it! So long, Bill and all the true-believers. I;ve had it.
    The mumbler!

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    Frog and Toad Reading Comprehension

    Script:

    Let's pause here. Did you follow along? Great! Now, let's talk about the story. I'll ask you a question, and you can select the answer with your stylus. Ready? When does Toad want Frog to wake him up? April, May, or June? That's right! Now, what month is it in the story? Oops, try again. Not quite--try looking back at the last page again. That's right! You answered both questions--go ahead and turn the page when you're ready to keep reading.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jesskaufman7's recording

    This is just for practice, NOT for recording quality. I recorded it on my ipad with no mic. :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-83796/script-recording-72764.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice, very well suited to the material. I think your tone matched the script spot on. Considering you recorded this on your ipad, the sound is good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jess,

    I really think you nailed the emotion you needed on that type of script. Impressive !!

    Keep it up!

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    Fundamentals of the Material Library

    Script:

    Welcome to Module 1, “Fundamentals” of the Material Library version 4.2.1, Web-based training. This course takes approximately sixty minutes to complete.

    Module 1, “Fundamentals” of the Material Library 4.2.1 Web-based training course contains four lessons. Module 2, “Advanced Applications”, contains four lessons. Most of the lessons in these modules end with a Knowledge Check to measure the user’s learning. The user must successfully complete the Knowledge Check to continue to the next lesson. In order to be issued a license to install Material Library version 4.2.1 onto his or her computer, the user must complete the final Knowledge Checks in Modules 1 and 2 with a minimum score of 80 percent.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Steven Anderson's recording

    I've been looking for an improved way to process my audio, and I now think I've found it. I'd like feedback on this audition for a WBT. Thanks! -Steven

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7852/script-recording-35147.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow! You handle this script so well! I noticed just a couple of small tongue twister moments but all in all I am quite impressed. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Monica! Thanks for the feedback. You would be right - I could not get these words to play nice with the rest of the phraseology:
    the Material Library 4.2.1

    But I'm glad you dig it. Here's hoping I get the gig. :)

    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steve!
    I´m not going to comment on the technical side, ´cause there are more people here that are masters in that area!
    Overall ,I liked your performance, sounded professional and I do believe the pace and inflection were right here.
    One little observation: the words "learning", "lesson" and "computer", sound exactly the same and breaks the smoothness of the read. How would your work those words?
    The funny thing is, that the following word to each of those words, begin on the same tone....? Interesting pattern.... All the best, Eva

    Peer Feedback:

    Having been on the employee end of many a computer training session, I can honestly say this was nearly flawless. The only thing I noticed, performance wise, was actually saying the "Material Library 4.2.1". To me whenever that part was mentioned, it sounded a wee bit rushed. Other than that it sounded VERY good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done Steve. One thing right at the beginning I found was that you were introducing Module 1 "Fundamentals". Personally I think there should have been a slight pause to create a focus on that since it just rolled onto "the material library..." you want to introduce the listener to each NEW section they are going to learn. Great job tho!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback, everyone. I booked it! (*dances*)

    Eva - I actually did not notice either of those patterns before this comment. Good catch! I'll try to pay attention to my patterns a little more in my reads as a check on it getting stale. Thanks!

    brimon - Thanks! Yeah, Material Library 4.2.1 is one humbling tongue twister. I'm glad you liked the read.

    danielk - I've started to do that more in my WBT reads after listening back a couple of times and looking at comments (like yours!): "Welcome to (pause) (ClassName) (pause). This course...." I think I got intimidated by "Material Library..." so I rushed it instead of taking my time. Good observation.

    Thanks again! The feedback is really helpful.
    -Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounded good. You need to not break up the 'In order to be issued...' sentence as much as you did.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi,
    I thought your performance was excellent, with crystal clear voice and diction, a tone that was confident and instructional, and pacing that seemed right. The quality of the audio sounded like it should. I think your audition is very strong.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice for instructional audio.. Clear and precise.. Great recording quality.. No need to get into any nit picky stuff.. If this was a job, I'm sure you'd polish it up where needed...
    I'd listen to your instructions..

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    Gardening for Dummies

    Script:

    Unless you live in an area where summers are really short, you're better off sowing some types of vegetables directly in a garden. Large-seeded, fast-growing vegetables, such as corn, melons, squash, beans, and peas, usually languish if they're grown in containers for even a day or two too long.

    Before transplanting your seedlings, you need to prepare your soil and your garden must be ready to plant. When setting out plants in biodegradable peat pots, make slits down the sides of the pots or gently tear the sides to enable the roots to push through. Also, tear off the lip, or top, of the pot, so that it doesn't stick up above the soil surface and pull moisture out of the soil.

    Thank you for your feedback! David Mangini

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dmangini's recording

    Just practicing and choosing material for my demo. Does this work for my voice? David

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3498/script-recording-24993.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice works well for this material. Would be nice to hear your full voice for better judgement, but as you posted here, I'd say it's a match. Don't care for the mic, but you're just asking for opinion on the voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your read was very good for a "how to". If this is for a demo, I think you need a better mike....

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! Like your voice; goes well with the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd say you have the voice for the script but material for a demo? Definitely not. This is a snooze piece. Unless that's what your going after. As bait I don't think you're going to catch anything with it. The read was fine.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback.
    As for the microphone; I completely agree this mic is only good for practice and experimentation when away from home. It's just a simple mic connected to my iPhone with a simple editing app (iRig). I would not use this for production work.
    Richurd, thanks for the feedback on the boring choice of material; I'll consider that.
    David

    Peer Feedback:

    SOMEone has to read these things! It might not be snazzy, but there's a market for these books. You should have something representing on your narration demo...

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear christi's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7295/script-recording-24317.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    very clear and smooth pace...i like it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone, very pleasant voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nlice! Your voice works well with this type of genre!

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    Girl's On-Course Survival Guide to Golf--Puppies

    Script:

    A Girl’s On-Course Survival Guide to Golf
    Does Your Chest Get in the Way of Hitting the Ball? There is a Solution.

    Just because you are well-endowed doesn’t mean you cannot hit a golf ball like your smaller-chested peers. There is a simple solution for large-chested women.
    At address, don’t stand too upright; instead round off your shoulders. This allows your arms to hang away from your body, allowing more room to swing freely around those puppies.

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sheri Speaks's recording

    I found a very female-centric piece for an educational narration on golf. Would appreciate your thoughts on my delivery and the script.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1157/script-recording-24214.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds very nice and professional to me as a newbee to the VO world.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Sheri, your conversational tone was great. The topic was really funny. : )

    Peer Feedback:

    Funny script, done well.

    Peer Feedback:

    HA HA HA....loved this Sheri...good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Sheri!

    I love this read and thought it was both hilarious and helpful/empathetic. I thought you could have brought even more of the humor into it, however, by really relishing in the language. For instance, that last word "puppies" when referring to the breasts is so hilarious and you made it sound quite nice. Adding a little more wink to the read with words like that, I thought would bring it to life even more. But overall your energy was great and it was nice and clear.

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    Gobi Desert

    Script:

    The Gobi desert of Central Asia is one of the earth’s most desolate places. It’s million square kilometers of sand dunes, sculpted badlands, and saw toothed mountains are alternately scorched by summer’s high latitude sun and frozen by winter’s Siberian winds. It’s not a place to explore unprepared. Crossing vast uninhabitable areas, between a sprinkling of oasis, requires planning akin to the siege tactics for scaling a Himalayan peak or traversing the Antarctic Continent.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ECT893's recording

    Thought that my foreboding monotone might be suited to this stark narration. Your opinion? Thanks for taking the time to comment, this site is a neat learning tool. The music is "Myself When Young" from the 1970 Cadet album 'The Rubaiyat of Dorothy Ashby'.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4510/script-recording-25311.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think I got your "foreboding monotone . . . stark narration" and lack of emotion intent. However, the sterile and choppy delivery--aside from being monotonous--did not convince me to think twice about visiting this arid, isolated wasteland without serious preparation and planning. The read was . . . well, reading. Example: "It's not A place"--long A--is reading, not conversation. I did not hear urgent warning "for all ye who dare enter." I did not get who you were talking to. Nor did I hear key word script clues: desolate, scorched, frozen, uninhabitable. What I liked: music choice & pace. I'm not an engineer, but sound seemed clear and clean. Best of luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, thanks for taking the time to listen and comment. I posted this reading more as a lark, maybe hoping against hope that it would somehow be perfect for the material? Well, rats - maybe there just isn't a place for my robot voice and I'd better get back on the path of discovering 'warmth' and 'personableness'. Again, I appreciate your input in helping me to find the right tone that a potential casting agent will be looking for.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Again ETC893--
    Remember, mine is only one take on your read. The "right tone" is the one that gets the gig. I wouldn't assume "there isn't a place for your robot voice." In Voice Land, there's room for every voice--just a matter of reaching that listener who "gets" your delivery (again, the one with the checkbook). I'm new to this forum, and I like that the feedback encourages flexibility in telling the story--which in turn builds technique. Keep at it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like a flatter read on narratives. this one might have been a little too flat, and the pace seemed quick in some places where you could've taken a little more time. You might try editing in pauses in certain areas, as if you were laying down a track for a documentary.

    I think your voice is perfectly suited for this style of read. Not every narration has to be Sam Elliot.

    I like the Egyptian sound bed (very desertie) - you might've tried a Chinese or Mongolian theme (seeing as the Gobi is mostly in China) - but that's neither here nor there...

    Nicely done

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    Golf Tips Magazine

    Script:

    In the “Star Wars” movies, the Jedi Knights harnessed the mystical powers of The Force to fight the Evil Empire. Wouldn’t it be great to call upon an all-powerful energy to fight ‘Ol Man Bogey? Truth is, you can, by harnessing the forces of simple physics. In order to move any object, force must be applied. If you paid any attention in high-school physics, you would be aware of this…and you would recall Newton’s second law of motion. Newton tells us that force is a combination of mass and acceleration. So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives. So, next time on the tee…may The Force be with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mhare11's recording

    Found this in the Edge library. Not sure if it was really taken from a magazine, but I envisioned it as part of a series of quick golf tip videos, with a little sense of humor to it. Looking for any and all feedback - thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-97875/script-recording-91357.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    IMHO, you're working the words too much. It sounds more like an uncomfortable lecturer trying to draw the humor out than an amusing golf instruction.

    But you hit your stride here:

    "So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives."

    The delivery was very smooth, easy and relatable. Then it got strident again for the last line. Trying to "force" the analogy. ("Force" - Get it?)

    Yes, this is probably meant to be an instructional video on golf tips. But you want to relate this information to one person at a time. So (if you golf), pick a good golfing buddy to explain Newton's Second Law of Motion and how it applies to a golf swing. It's amusing enough without trying so hard (working the words).

    The other thing is to take a little time here and there. After your setup (the first sentence), you ask a question (albeit rhetorical). So let your audience (your golfing buddy) ponder that for a mili-second or two. Then you give the amazing answer that it's actually possible and explain how. It's like the Good Witch in The Wizard of Oz telling
    Dorothy that she had the power within her to go home all along.

    Recording quality is generally good. Did you apply any FX processing? It sounds closer to a raw recording than a fully produced finished product.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. I was actually feeling a little unsure about certain parts of it, for the very things you point out. Feeling sort of "actor-ish", if that's a word, and not as natural. So figured I'd see what others thought.
    The only processing was noise removal. At this point I'm working out of a closet with blankets hung on the walls. Sometimes I hear this low hum in the background, sometimes I don't. I turn off the AC and anything else that's running, but I can't seem to figure out where it comes from. So when I hear it, I use the noise removal feature of Audacity. Seems to remove it pretty well - but I'd love to figure out what it is and just get rid of it.
    Thanks for the feedback!

    Peer Feedback:

    Is it an electronic type hum (like tuning in a short wave radio) or a static-like hum (like when a broadcast signs off)?

    If it's electronic sounding, like a steady wavering sound with pitches, it's more than likely your cabling or microphone picking up some king of electronic interference - coiled or crossed cabling, bad cabling, florescent lighting, house wiring, a bad surge protector, even the proximity of your mic to your interface or computer.

    If it's static, it's more than likely that your mic is picking up and amplifying ambient noise.

    NR can take care of a lot of that. Try using a high pass filter set at about 60Hz - 70Hz to roll off the lower rumble frequencies. It won't effect your voice - vocal frequencies don't get that low.

    You're also going to want to investigate fiddling with a little EQ to give your sound a little more "body" and clarity (sharpness) - to create a "fuller" sound. The settings won't be very drastic, just little tweaks.

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    Golf Tips Magazine

    Script:

    Golf Tips Magazine: Edge Script

    In the “Star Wars” movies, the Jedi Knights harnessed the mystical powers of The Force to fight the Evil Empire. Wouldn’t it be great to call upon an all-powerful energy to fight ‘Ol Man Bogey? Truth is, you can, by harnessing the forces of simple physics. In order to move any object, force must be applied. If you paid attention in high-school physics, you would be aware of this…and you would recall Newton’s second law of motion. Newton tells us that force is a combination of mass and acceleration. So, the way to hit a golf ball farther is to apply greater force. By swinging the mass of the clubhead with maximum acceleration, which is in itself a function of speed, you’ll increase the length of your drives. So, next time on the tee…may The Force be with you.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear msacay's recording

    Wanted to get away from audiobooks for awhile, and try some e-learning. Wanted to be more playful so I chose this one, which seemed a fitting tribute to the upcoming Star Wars movie.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105999/script-recording-86067.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello,

    Your voice and delivery sound good. Your quality is good as well, sounds like you have a pretty well treated space.

    One critique, I'm hearing a lot of clicks at the ends of phrases. I think those are your edits in the DAW. Are you using room tone to cover up the edits? Or are you just deleting tracks and pushing them together?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks! The clicks may be from my mouth or maybe my hands...I didn't edit it. Did it in one take. Still learning how to use Audacity so my editing technique (or any technical knowledge beyond pushing record button) is pretty much below basic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, lots of mouth noise and extraneous breathing. Keep hydrated and practice stringing longer phrases together on one breath. (But if you have a condition - like asthma - in which you find that difficult to do, consider strategically editing some of them out to get the phrases to flow more naturally.)

    From the top: You're working the words too hard - to the point that this is sounding like a children's story. With the understanding that it's totally unintentional on your part, it comes close to an attitude of sounding condescending - or at the very least that (as an adult) I'm being talked down to - like I don't understand what the words "Evil Empire" mean.

    Furthermore, consider your audience. Avid golfers are nutz! (A grave generalization, I know, but somewhat true. Why would a friend of mine who is a "scratch golfer" go out and spend thousands of dollars on clubs and thinking he's going to become the next Tiger Woods?) And competitive golfers are considered great athletes. (But, c'mon, look at some of these guys. Walking around the links is one thing, but I'd challenge them to run the 220 dash without keeling over.) Either way, these folks are serious! So, the instructional tone of this kind of thing needs to sound authoritative instead of story-like.

    UNRELATED TO THIS READ

    You asked in a previous audiobook read how to deal with page turns.

    Barbara Rosenblat (and other big-time audiobook narrators) usually request the loose leaf manuscript (or "galley" as it is called in publishing) rather than the book proper. (At her level, the physical book and the audiobook usually are published simultaneously.) What she does is place 2 page stacks on the music stand in front of her at a time and very delicately draws the next page over to the finished pile, trying not to make a rustling sound. Doesn't always work, in which case she leaves a slight pause for editing. She almost always (99.99% of the time) goes to a studio to do her recording with a director and engineer. She doesn't record at home - she has an aversion to learning what a DAW is.

    Most other people (including myself) read from a tablet. I either get sent a PDF, Word file, Kindle or Nook version of the book. I can even make notes for myself - difficult pronunciations, highlight logical places to breathe in run-on sentences, mistakes I've made to correct with punch-ins, etc. I can even change the font size and line spacing to be more readable for me, and swiping my finger across the screen makes virtually no noise.

    NOT A COMMERCIAL ENDORSEMENT

    Larry Hudson

    http://www.larryhudsonvo.com/#!__vo-heaven

    is offering a relatively inexpensive 5-week webinar based course on Audacity. Well worth the $150 to learn how to effectively use the software. Here's a link:

    https://docs.google.com/forms/d/1AUsFxbIzAM_j5NBoydAT9ffdsA3NfNc5mSY5yok...

    Peer Feedback:

    James, you're the best! No asthma, but I am thinking my UHaull covers I'm using to deaden the sound might be making my throat a little tight. Plus it was definitely late at night and I was tired when recording. Actually just finished a 3 hr webinar session on Edge and was playing around with that piece. I'm not a golfer and you are right it does come off condescending if you're a golfer.

    I did follow your advice and looked Barbara up. I can hear what you mean and why she is at the top of her game. Obviously a gifted performer all around too. I bought her book on performing for audio books. Glad to know she doesn't mess with DAWs! She saves her energy and time on her performance. Great tips on page turns! Will definitely check out the webinar on Audacity! You sir are a wealth of information. Your candid, thorough, and humorous feedback is always greatly appreciated!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Shucks, M'am. Yer makin' me blush!

    Peer Feedback:

    I second Larry Hudson's course. I just finished his last course a few weeks ago, myself.

    I think these guys got it pretty well handled, but I did want to say, it's pronounced BOH-GHEE not BOO-GHEE.

    Peer Feedback:

    LOL! In the words of Yoda..Golfer I am Not..

    Peer Feedback:

    lol that's a good life choice ;)

    Peer Feedback:

    Bogey = One Stroke Over Par
    on any given hole.

    Peer Feedback:

    Adding to what James was saying about reading from a tablet. I MUCH prefer the tablet and a PDF document. With a PDF, I can simply scroll down and down and never have to pause as the pages simply follow the next as you scroll down. I had to read from the Kindle app and HATE reading from the Kindle app I find...they try to make it book-like in experience...so there's virtual page turns. Also, from a PDF, I can copy/paste into my word processor if there's a lot of corrections to make.

    Peer Feedback:

    Unfortunately, I don't own a tablet. Maybe Santa will bring me one. I agree as PDF would be the way to go. Do you put it on a stand or hold it? My mic is on a floor stand with a half shell on the back. So it's like I have to do calisthenics to see the script while turning my mouth towards the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've got a scissor mic "stand" mounted in the corner of my booth, so I'm able to mount my tablet on a mic stand right in front of me. There's also some tablet holders which could mount on the stand below the mic itself...but might introduce some noise during the session while touching the tablet. I would recommend keeping them separate.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good tip! Thank you!

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    Growing Orchids

    Script:

    What to keep in mind about growing orchids.

    While each type of orchid has its own care requirements, the following five factors affect all blooms:

    Light: The plant’s tender leaves can be burned by too much direct sunlight, Yet, insufficient light stunts the growth of certain varieties.

    Temperature: Orchids that require cooler temperatures can often be well-placed in a low spot near the floor; plants needing warmer environment might do better up on shelves. In general, avoid putting orchids in drafty shelves.

    Humidity: Orchids love moisture and thrive with frequent misting.
    Fertilizer: While healthy orchids require plenty of nutrients, too much plant food can cause blackened leaf-tips.

    Water: It’s usually best to water in the morning so moisture has time to evaporate from the plant throughout the day.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/growing orchids.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is very pleasant to listen to for this educational type read. Maybe just a little slower read so that the listener can gather the information a little more easily. Liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Since Dave Crosier got me in a techno mode, I'll comment on your technical as well...

    First off, you're popping your Ps.

    There's quite a bit of low-frequency energy below 50 Hz. Your voice doesn't go down that low, so it's most likely mud (that's a technical term) from the room. Both this and the P-pops can be reduced with a sharp rolloff filter starting somewhere in the, oh, 75 to 100 range. If your microphone or preamp has a low cut (or "High Pass") filter, you probably want to be turning it on.

    The noise floor is kind of high. There is some mouth noise and some other funny clicks (edit points?) in the "silent" section, but the noise floor appears to be about -40dB (at best).

    "throughout the day" - sounds like it was recorded in a different take and edited in. It doesn't really match the rest of the read.

    Try adding a little ( a couple of dB) EQ boost at around 200 Hz - it really sounds great on your voice to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    E' Field -

    I don't read others comments so hope my ramblings are fresh thoughts for you...

    I now know more about Orchids than I ever wanted to...thank you! Seriously, a quality narration voice -- pleasant, warm, believable and edifying...

    There was some Poppin' of the Ps which is cured with an ever so slight turn of the head as you pronounce hard Ps, Ts and so Ss...matched with a Pop Filter that should cure the matter. There was also a technical 'thing' going on in the background that sounded like an audio clipping...irritating given your high quality voice

    I enjoyed hearing your read -- Nice Job!!

    Bill

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    Guitar Tip With Music

    Script:

    And now for the Guitar Tip Of The Week:
    Take care of your hands. You can finger notes more easily if you keep the nails on your fret hand trimmed short. Leave the nails on your picking hand slightly longer to facilitate plucking the strings. Rough edges on your nails will impair the tone of your playing, so be sure to use a good set of clippers and an emery board to maintain smooth nail tips. Wash your hands prior to playing. Clean hands transmit less dirt and help maintain string life and tone.

    28 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Moe Biscuits's recording

    Already uploaded this one, but added music to it this time. Wondering how the mix sounds to everyone else.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-59923/script-recording-63445.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The music is nice, and you have a great voice, but I don't get the sense that you're really engaged in what you're saying. I think you might want to aim for a friendlier delivery. And in the last sentence, "clean" should be emphasized. Almost there. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read, music could be a little lower, but otherwise sounded pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds straight from a info video

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    Hope Now

    Script:

    The land of Rwanda, Land of 1000 hills, lush, prosperous, a beautiful God created land... A land with a rich history and a story that brings laughter, tears, and hope. In 1994, Rwanda survived a genocide that changed the course of the whole country. A genocide that killed nearly 1 million Rwandans in just 100 days- 20% of the countries population. This civil war, tore a nation, devastated lives and communities. This was a time for tears...

    31 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jennthurston's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-18530/script-recording-39746.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jenn,

    Your voice is absolutely beautiful! The delivery was clear, nice pace, pitch, good amount of emotion and totally relatable. You definitely could succeed within the Voice Over industry.
    Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very very nice voice. I'll say that first off. I'm not so certain that your tone really matches a documentary style though. I can hear you doing so many things such as advertising, audio books and probably documentaries, but in this instance, you sound as if you're selling Johnson & Johnson baby shampoo instead of emphasizing a very tragic story. You do have a fairly somber tone, but to me, not serious enough for the words. It's just my humble opinion. Don't get me wrong: I believe you definitely have the tools for VO.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good copy interpretation! I felt the "emotion" behind the copy.
    Your vocal performance was excellent! Very clear, filled with a mix of sorrow and history.
    Recording quality was very good. Very clear!

    In my opinion, you have an excellent voice!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think Brian had some very valid points. This was a tragedy, a genocide, an cleansing of a million people. The tone to me felt as though you were selling a travel package not telling the story of horror and bloodshed of women, children who couldn`t escape do to poverty or entrapment. How would you have told the story if you were there just after this happened and walked around the affected areas? It just sounded too happy to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    BrianPoole is right on. It's a tragic subject and the tone needs to reflect it. Aside from that, you have a gorgeous voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Insert a little more sadness to your commentary.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jennifer,
    Great voice!! I thought the read could have been just a bit slower...and even more emotive. Try this one again...you have the potential to kill this one.

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    How To Accessorize A Bedroom

    Script:

    The decorating scheme in a bedroom shouldn't bore you to sleep every night. Choose accessories that are attractive as well as functional, but avoid clutter. A decorative box is a great hiding place for a remote control, eyeglasses, tissues and other typical bedside paraphernalia. Place a telephone and a flashlight within reach of the bed. These items can be life savers during an emergency.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sabrinasvoice's recording

    Does this read sound seamless or can you hear the edits? How is the performance?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4472/script-recording-28337.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina,
    Very nice voice! Smooth delivery, compliments the script very well. One little adjustment, try to end your sentence with a little more energy, it sounds as though your level drops the last couple of words; in doing so it can only be a plus to an already good read. With that said this was very well done. I am sure that you would also do a great job with instructional audios and videos.

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't hear a sonic difference at edits, but I can tell you edited because your space between the first and second sentence is unnaturally quick. And since you didn't say you edited the script, I'll point these out: "hiding place for (a) remote control, eyeglasses, tissue(s) and" with the letters in parenthesis being omitted from your read. And there was accent in "eyeglasses."

    Vocally very pleasing. Pace was good overall, but like mentioned, the pauses edited down were too quick to me. Good overall read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sabrina, I liked your recording. I thought you read the copy as it should and couldn't tell if there were any edits. I'm using earbuds though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you JavierSvoice, TxTom, and amichaelgray I really appreciate the feedback. I will try instructional reads. It is very encouraging to hear good things about my voice. Thank you all.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi sabrina,
    I might suggest rehearsing the script until you know it backwards and forwards. It's only a paragraph. By recording each sentence and splicing them together you run the risk of throwing the read off and losing the flow. The problem is not so much in how close to edit the next word but the force you use in starting each sentence. Rather than getting a nice even flow to your delivery it comes in small waves at the beginning of each sentence. Get to know the script, be comfortable with it. Too many rush to record before preparing for the read. Don't get discouraged, be tenacious, make it work.

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    Incline Village - Virtual Tour/E Learning

    Script:

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear chrissy45's recording

    Appreciate any comments as I am fairly new to VO biz. Working on getting a better set up as far as recording space goes as well as figuring out the Audacity program. It's all very exciting and I love it. Currently have a Snowbal mic but thinking of getting a VO 1-A or B1 Condenser mic. Any thoughts are welcome on that score as well. Cheers - Christine

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-31488/script-recording-48269.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    where do I sign up....you sold me....good job

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy45 --
    welcome to the forum!
    I like the accent. recording quality was pretty good for a beginner with a Snowball . If you ask for opinions on microphones on this forum, you'll get lots of them! I personally like Blue Microphones (of which your snowball is a junior member).

    Regarding your read: nice voice, and a great start. I thought your activity list seemed a bit flat, though. need more modulation there. Besides, look at how awesome each choice on the list is! well, except for Event Facilities....

    BTW, "Frequently Asked Questions" is a single thing...(a noun? aka "FAQ")

    I think a scenic Lake Tahoe resort recording should really really exciting, etc. I think you could put a little more juice in this message.

    hopefully helpful,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy.

    I think you did a good job here. With elearnng scripts its important to let the user adsorb the content with you as you tell the instructions or message of the elearning program. I felt it all blended together and if I was clicking along may have trouble searching the screen looking for the buttons and may miss the next section or instruction. keep that in mind as you address your listener. Over all the tone was nice, and there was an awkward pause in "frequently asked questions". The end "lets get started" seemed to me that you wanted this to end rather than get going. Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you to all you sent comments to me. It really does help and this is a one of the great things about the Edgedtudio site. I will be doing a lot more practice pieces and look forward to receiving comments, help, advice etc. Cheers to all Chrissy45

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    Incline Villiage

    Script:

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

    Script from Edge Studio's 4,869 Practice Script Library >
    English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

    34 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Want to see if I finally got my setup working properly and shaking off some dust from a brief break.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Virtual Tour Incline Villiage.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    From the top - "Hello" sounded more surprised (like saying it to a person you hadn't expected) than a warm, inviting greeting. The difference between "HELLo" and "h'lLO". Just my impression.

    One thing that will help you vocally set off "Enter" is to actually physically make "air quotes" with your fingers. It automatically makes you set off and emphasize the word. Same thing with ("fax"). (And to the writer - Why use parenthesis and quotes? Kinda redundant, ain't it?)

    The ending had a lot of character. Nice touch to get someone excited to be cruising the information on what I assume is an information kiosk.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great recording in terms of quality. Sounds like you're talking to someone not reading.
    In a few places, the pacing is uneven and certain words aren't articulated fully or clearly i.e. 'virtual' and 'frequently'. This takes away from an otherwise good and engaging read.

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    Instantaneous Displacements

    Script:

    As you can see in Figure 3-1, a bar is fixed at one and is set into vibration by tapping it from the bottom. Imagine that a strobe light is used to take a series of snapshots of the bar as it vibrates up and down.

    At each snapshot the instantaneous displacement of the bar is measured. Instantaneous displacement is the distance between the rest position of the bar (defined as zero displacement) and its position at any particular instant in time.

    Positive numbers signify displacements that are above the rest position, while negative numbers signify displacements that are below the rest position. The vibratory pattern that is traced out when the sequence of displacements is graphed is called a sinusoid.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear stevengonzalesvo's recording

    Brutal Critique is welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-54626/script-recording-77565.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steven,

    First off, I want to say that you have a nice, friendly voice! I noticed right off the bat that you were over enunciating the words, and it sounded very repetitious.

    I hope that this helps, have a Wonderful Day!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Tone and sound quality is nice. As Carol had mentioned the "t's" were hit too hard in most areas. When you relaxed on the T's some mouth noise started to come in (more of a saliva sound). To me it sounds as though English is a second language in which you are trying to overcompensate to pronounce "correctly" in every word you are saying. That's great, and once you relax and start to back off a bit you will smoothen out the rhythm and flow of the reads. I had a listen to the demos on your website. Same type of problem.

    Dialect coaches should be able to assist with that as well. Again the sound and tone is very nice.

    -dk-

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Carol and Daniel.

    Thanks for the feedback. Your comments about my over-enunciating are in line with what my practice groups and coaches have had to say. I'll be providing another take soon with corrections.

    Thanks again!
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Like they say, once is an anomaly, twice is possibly coincidence, but three times is a trend.

    I have to concur with Carol and Daniel to a degree. There is a tendency to over-articulate or over-compensate for what Daniel perceived as a slightly Hispanic (judging from your last name) accent. That tendency has you concentrating on "correctness" rather than content. As a result, parts of the read seems a little disconnected which may cause the listener to concentrate on the delivery instead of the information that's being imparted. It's subtle. Take the second sentence for example. You're asking for the listener to "imagine", to get a picture in their mind of what you're describing. So, maybe slowing the pace or use a little more casual inflection, breaking down the component parts of the sentence - or actually physically doing something as you speak; like popping your hands open and shut like a strobe, actually taking that picture with an imaginary camera and waggling a finger up and down in a sine wave motion. Those physical movements will come out through your voice. It'll give you that "connection" to the material. If you were a professor standing up in front of a class, that's probably what you'd do (physically) to emphasize the point you're making.

    I also went to your website (BTW - nice site and great logo) and listened to your demos. A couple of questions: Is it an Edge product? (I'm thinking not, but I also don't think that they were self-produced. However, some of the scripts were recognizable as Edge Library scripts. The sound quality is very good though.) My suggestion would be to come up with a few more original pieces of copy. Did you have someone directing/coaching you?

    Also, the long A's (especially in the Narration demo) are a little odd sounding. "Uh" would be more "natural" sounding (in most cases) as the way one would say it in "conversation." And, as Daniel touched on, the "formalness" or "correctness" of the pronunciation gets in the way of your actual "connection" to the thoughts and to the listener.

    One thought on the perceived accent. I noticed that you list yourself as Middle Age / Senior as a voice type. Quite honestly, until I saw that (and your picture on LinkedIn), I wouldn't have thought that just by listening to your voice - you sound, maybe not quite millennial, but younger than an old fogey like me. With the understanding that it is difficult (but not impossible) for us old dogs to learn new tricks (in your case, a slight accent correction), you might flip that around and use it to your advantage. With all of the talk of the Neutral American sound for VO, there actually are people out there that talk the way you do and can relate to the way you naturally sound. This culture is becoming more "eclectic" in the types of people we are (and how we sound/speak). For instance, there is a trend for that "urban" sound for quite a few things now. Trends change and it may swing in another direction. So, I would encourage you to investigate what Daniel suggests (a dialect coach), but (even though it may be somewhat limiting in the VO market) also be who you are. Take Arron Rodger's advice: R-E-L-A-X. Could be that you're just trying to hard. Who knows, you may start the next trend.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, James.
    I don't like to speak about myself; however, in this case it may be helpful. I really am much more from the French than from Hispanic. Only one thread of the four (maternal/paternal,etc) is Hispanic. But it gave me my surname.

    People from south Louisiana tend to cut corners when speaking. Slurries are a way of life :-). Maybe I'm trying too hard to overcome that issue.

    Thanks for the kind words about my website. I designed the logo myself (took all of about 15 minutes since I knew what I wanted) and designed/programmed the site. After Apple stopped supporting Flash, I redesigned it with smart devices in mind.

    My demos are not self-produced and was not produced by Edge. They are cited as non-competitive by at least three people (what did you say about trends? :-) ).

    Love the Aaron Rodgers reference.

    Thanks for your advice which, as always, is gold.
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Steven,

    Kind of knew the accent was something other than Hispanic (N.O. Cajun?), but it shows you how our perception can be somewhat tainted by the suggestion of a name. However, that local colloquial-ness may do you well for the local market. As the politicians say, you'd be appealing to your base. So, I'd say, embrace it (for that market).

    You must be a Saints fan then. Can't think of a Drew Brees quote that fits the sentiment.

    Listen to demos on VoiceBank.net. IMHO, some of your spots (especially on the commercial demo) are too long (and that particular demo is, in itself, about 15 - 20 seconds too long in total). Think snippets rather than full spots - sometimes all need is a one-line tag.

    Looking forward to chatting with you about Reaper.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Steven,

    When I first started out on here, I over enunciated everything and it was a very bad habit. James and all of the other kind folks on here kindly reminded me of this and I finally broke the habit. Just like everyone is saying, Relax, and things will flow smoothly. I grew up in New York and have an accent, now I can switch over to a neutral one when I need too. It takes practice and patience, that will get you far in this business.

    Keep recording these scripts and listen to the critiques, they really helped me and have made me into the Voice talent that I am today!! I am very Thankful for all of the kindness that I have gotten on here : )

    So keep on Voicing!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Carol.

    And now you're one of the "kind folks"! :-) It is appreciated.

    Peer Feedback:

    If your looking for all "kind" reviews don't ask for "Brutal Critiques" ... :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Daniel,

    I _am_ asking for Brutal Critiques. Kind critiques are great: they show me what to keep. Brutal Critiques, like losing at chess, show me where improvement is needed. They are just as welcome.

    Humbly,
    Steven

    Peer Feedback:

    Main reason I've backed off commenting is that most seem to be seeking kind critiques. I'm not a fluffy bunny listening to unicorn farts. (vague reference...if you get it, you're watching a really bad show)

    Peer Feedback:

    lol +1 for Tom!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Tom.

    lol! Bring it on, my friend, bring it on!

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    Instructional/How-to Video

    Script:

    EXOSTENCIL is an exciting new product that simplifies the process of creating a silkscreen by eliminating the need for a film positive, photopolymer emulsion, UV exposure or drying time.

    This significantly reduces the time involved in creating a silkscreen from many steps (and hours) to just two steps and 5 minutes.

    This new dry stencil film also addresses the industry needs for safer and environmentally safer products by eliminating BPA and other additives from the whole process.

    Because EXOSTENCIL eliminates the need for extra products, equipment and time, this allows you to increase your profit margins by allowing your business to produce quality products cheaper and faster.

    To get started, print out art
    Place a transfer sheet over the art
    Peel back one corner for easy removal later.
    Place on heat press and cover with parchment paper.
    Heat at 210 degrees fahrenheit for 25 seconds using heavy pressure.
    When done, peel off the back sheet while the transfer is still hot

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    It's for a "how-to" video, so mainly just want it to be informative but also upbeat and engaging.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-94887.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording was clean. Pacing was consistent. May have been a little slow. I think the performance got better as you got deeper into the copy.

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    Introduction to HDInsight

    Script:

    Windows Azure HDInsight makes Apache Hadoop and the MapReduce software framework available in a simpler, more scalable, and cost efficient Windows Azure environment. I can quickly provision an HDInsight cluster in Windows Azure and run a MapReduce job. By using HDInsight, I pay only for the compute capacity and the storage that I use. When I'm done, I can simply delete the cluster without paying any further charges.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Gary Ericson's recording

    What I'm really looking for is EQ feedback (though you're welcome to comment on the performance). I'm recording in a homemade vocal booth (like a Porta-Booth) - it reduces room echo but it sounds muffled to me. I've got 2 takes here: first, with no EQ; second, dipping 100 Hz and below (-4dB) and boosting around 5kHz (+6dB), trying to brighten it up a bit. Does it help or make it worse? Do I just need a better mic? Using an AKG Perception 100 mic and Scarlet 2i2 on a PC with Audacity.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5183/script-recording-66511.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Definitely take 2. Brighter, crisper, brings your voice out up front!

    David Michaelson

    Peer Feedback:

    It does sound a bit boxy, but there's really not much below 100 Hz in your untreated recording, so cutting there really isn't doing anything. 6dB boost @5KHz is too much.

    Here's what sounds pretty good to me. I didn't spend a lot of time tweaking, so use this as a starting point:

    -2.0dB low shelf starting around 300Hz
    +2.3dB around 800 Hz, bandwidth 1.5 octave
    +2.6dB around 4.5KHz, bandwidth 0.8 octave

    I', listening on AKG K240 headphones, Equator D5 speakers, and cheapo computer monitor speakers. Can't hear much difference on the cheapo speakers, but on the others it sounds more natural to me. A bit of de-essing (I'm using a free plugin called spitfish) seems to help as well...

    I have one of these mics and never liked the sound of it on vocals (mine) until I tried it through a Focusrite ISA One preamp. I think maybe it's the transformer input on that preamp that tames the high end of this mic, but I'm not sure... Oh, and of course that preamp costs like 5 times as much as the mic (yikes!)

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the un-EQ'd sound was better and much more natural. The second read had a definite lack of natural timbre. I don't think either read has evidence of room noise and neither sounds "muffled" as you state, but that might result from you being familiar with the room you're reading in and being aware of what you're hearing through your system. The first clip isn't a bad sound.

    My question would be: Are you seeking to "brighten" the sound? Is that based on your perception that you think it sounds muffled? Are you trying to over-come the perceived "muffled" sound? To that end, I would like to hear the recording without your "porta-studio" style set-up.

    I guess I'd have to say that the first recording sounded more natural than the second and for some reason, listening to the second after the first, I felt like someone had suddenly turned off some of the EQ bands. It sounded/felt like someone had quickly shoved a band or two down.

    Oh, and on the mic...I had a Perception 220 before I went on to purchase an AKG C414 XLS. I have to say, that in my experience, AKG tends to be a little shrill or brittle on the top end. Their mics are great for acoustic instruments...but IMO, not so much for vocals. I traded both AKGs in toward a Neumann and have been MUCH happier with the sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    Gary,

    A couple of questions; how close are you to the mic? what is your recording level set at on the knob of the scarlett?

    One trick might be backing up to about 8 inches from the mic, elevate it slightly above your mouth, pointed down, and slightly off axis to one side. This may alleviate some of the 'proximity' effect i'm hearing with the recording. It gives the mic a little room to breath.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, everyone, for your comments. This is terrific.

    Sundance: Thanks for the specific EQ numbers (and the spitfish idea). I'll try these on my next project this weekend. I wish I knew an absolute EQ 'standard' I could conform to, but I guess I just need to get my ears trained. I should find an example of a professional with a similar timbre as mine, whose sound I really like, and then try to emulate that.

    TxTom: I'm just concerned about a "muffled" sound. I don't necessarily want it brighter, per se, I just want to make sure that it doesn't sound like I'm talking in a box (I am, I just don't want it to sound like it :-). The different opinions here make me think that it may be a preference thing, though it sounds like the consensus is that the rough EQ tweaking I did makes it generally sound more unnatural.

    zm15: The Scarlett mic volume is set at about 3:00 (don't know what the label says). I'm 6-8 inches from the mic. My 'booth' is a large plastic bin, turned on its side, standing lengthwise, and lined with acoustic foam. The mic is near the top center, angled, pointing down toward me; my mouth is 6-8" away not directed straight at the mic. This stops room echo nicely, but I'd like to make a larger enclosure, like a real stand-up booth - even though it's lined with good foam, the plastic bin may be resonating bass more than I thought, so a larger enclosure might help with that and I can maybe get even further from the mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your "Harlan Box" sounds exactly like my original sound treatment. AND you're using an AKG Perception. VERY similar to what I was using. If your "bin" is closed in the back, it MIGHT resonate a little. I used a fold-able file box for my "bin"...it let sound out the side because they weren't solid. Be careful not to speak right into the box. I had a paper holder attached to the side to hold my script and to ensure that I was about 45º off axis. I read toward the script and was about 8 inches away from the mic. I didn't have resonation issues at all. MY biggest issue is that the room still comes into play because all the box/bin/portabooth does is take care of what's behind the mic and to the sides. If your room is less that silent (ambient noise) it will still get that. I live on a corner lot...lots of cars flying by. Always had to read between passing cars. The frustration often reflected in my reads. LOL

    As long as nothing comes between you and your mic, other than a pop screen, you'll not really muffle the sound. What you MIGHT be perceiving is a dulling of the room effects. Less lively a sound perhaps. The walls might be taken out of what you're hearing. That's usually a good thing.

    Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Checking in from the road...

    I have to disagree with what Tom said. The absorption the box provides is in the area where the mic is least sensitive, so its purpose is not to absorb reflections coming back toward the rear of the mic. Its purpose is to absorb/block as much of your voice as possible so it doesn't get past the box and bounce around the room. You should be talking directly into the box. Now, that said, it has very little efect on the low frequencies - it takes a lot of foam or fiberglass or whatever to absorb bass frequencies, so they are going to pass right through. If the room dimensions are such that you get bass buildup, the box won't help that. But you can try moving it around the room a bit and that may change the effect somewhat. A corner of the room would be thye worst possible spot for it, for example. You probably don't want to be smack dab in the center either...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom and Sundance -- I like the closed box because it reduces room echo; I don't need to block sound because the room is quiet (just a subtle PC fan, which I can deal with). I'm hoping this weekend to build a cheap 3'x3'x7' "booth", padded inside with moving blankets and acoustic foam. The goal is to eliminate room echo, but in a larger space so I can try moving back from the mic a little, and to give me a place to set up my mic and leave it (I currently have to remove the box from my desk after each recording, so my sound tends to be inconsistent from one session to the next). I just need to decide whether to build a PVC frame with blankets hanging from it, or nail together a plywood box - I'm not all that handy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Where Sundance and I are going to differ is whether to have the mic right in front of you or to have it off-axis. I prefer off-axis to reduce shrill esses. That would mean NOT speaking directly into the box. But...it's just advice, eh?

    Good luck with setting up a space. As long as your neighborhood and house are relatively quiet, you'd probably be happier with a PVC frame and moving blankets. Once you close in a plywood box, you start having to worry about boxy-ness. That pursuit can start to run up some $s.

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't say you have to have the mic right in front of you. It can be off-axis while you are speaking directly into the box. The mic does not have to be square to the box - you can rotate it a bit, move it off-center. Or, if you want to rotate your head to get it off-axis, rotate the box with it. The net effect is the same...

    Peer Feedback:

    Just to close the loop -- I ended up building a 36"x40"x7.5' frame out of 3/4" PVC pipe (didn't bother gluing the joints), then hung 3 inexpensive 36"x80" moving blankets all the way around, fastened at the top with safety pins. I covered the top with a large sheet of cardboard on which I glued acoustic foam (I could have used more blanket, but I had the foam laying around). Hung a light inside (with a CFL bulb so it doesn't get hot), set up the mic overhead and angled down towards my mouth (I talk past it instead of straight on), and added a music stand covered with a cloth. I've been standing to read, but I have a tall stool I could use if I want to sit. It feels roomy in there.

    It's not soundproof, which I didn't need because the room is quiet, but it does provide a very dead feel. It's a large enough space that I don't think I'm getting a boxy sound or bass emphasis like I felt I was getting with the port-booth setup.

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    Introduction to OSHA Federal Requirements

    Script:

    Introduction

    This chapter provides technical information about fall hazards and protection methods.
    The information is intended to help prepare OSHA compliance officers to conduct
    inspections and investigations. For convenience, links are provided to applicable OSHA
    standards throughout this chapter. This chapter does not cover all OSHA requirements for
    fall prevention/protection methods, and is not intended to serve as a comprehensive guide
    for developing compliant fall protection programs.

    Although fall hazards are common at construction worksites, fall-related injuries and
    fatalities are preventable. Fall hazards can be addressed in two main ways:

    Fall prevention: preventing workers from falling by using engineering controls (e.g.,
    guardrails and hole covers) or restraint systems.

    Fall arrest/rescue: preventing injury during and after a fall by using personal fall
    arrest systems (PFAS) or safety nets and having an effective rescue plan in place.

    Recognizing fall hazards and planning to control them before work begins is critical for
    determining the best methods and equipment for protecting workers during construction
    activities at heights.

    Emergency response planning will identify necessary emergency response training and
    critical resources (e.g., trained on-site fall arrest rescue team and rescue equipment).

    A number of OSHA standards contain provisions for protecting workers from falls. In the
    construction industry, applicable standards include:

    - 29 CFR 1926.500–.503: Fall Protection;
    - 29 CFR 1926.760: Steel Erection;
    - 29 CFR 1926.954: Electric Power Transmission and Distribution; and
    - 29 CFR 1926.1423: Cranes and Derricks.

    Refer to Appendix B for a more complete list of OSHA standards on fall protection.

    OSHA-approved state occupational safety and health plans may have different standards,
    but those standards must be at least as effective as federal OSHA requirements. More
    information about state plans is available on the OSHA website.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear montereichert's recording

    I'm new to VO and I am investigating what gene will work best for me. I have a BS degree in engineering and have spent over 30 years working in aerospace so my technical back ground is substantial. As such, I believe e-learning and corporate training may work best for me. I plan on working in the VO field part time for now and I hope to expand that to full time as a new career! PS: I am also excited about the possibility of VO in commercials if that manifests itself.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-110573/script-recording-94570.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you are perfectly suited for this type of copy. It is very difficult to read consistently but you did well. There was only 1 minor pause but it did not take away from the reading 8

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm hearing a regionalism in the delivery, but that's a minor concern compared to the rushed and over-articulated fashion in which the script was read. Slow it down...there's not likely a time limit...and relax the diction. Read the script as if you were talking to your best friend and not a microphone. The specific sections to look up ( the CFR stuff) might need some direction. It's slowed by the need to read each and every character which might be better delivered with some "knowledgeable shortcuts" that someone in the industry or in the production department might be able to provide. Not knowing where you got the copy, I can't answer that. If it was copy/pasted from a written manual, it might be modified for audio. Nice start.

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    Law Enforcement Educational Video

    Script:

    Managing a traditional paper-based FTO Program with Daily Observation Reports is cumbersome and often leads to:

    • Incomplete or missing documentation
    • Mangled forms and
    • Hurried entries with varying grade criteria and accountability standards

    All of this makes it difficult to pinpoint exactly when and where recruits go off track and whether the problem lies with the recruit or whether it is systemic.

    Fortunately, a better solution is available.

    The Law Enforcement Automated Personnel System – or LEAPS for short – is a paperless, web-based personnel management and training solution.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear kenbond's recording

    Target audience is law enforcement personnel, so delivery needs to be authoritative but still friendly.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113659/script-recording-96351.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice job Ken.Inflections are good and sentences are well spaced.Great inflections also. Well done

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    MacIntosh Switch

    Script:

    More people are interested in switching from PCs to Macs than ever before. Now, you’ll see why they made the switch, and just how easy it was! You’ll discover how compatible Macs are with PCs, learn all the great ways a Mac can give you a better digital life, and understand how Macs can make your life easier and your possibilities endless.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DV1's recording

    Hi There. Hope this finds you very well. I'm setting up my practice gear using Twisted Wave and a Rhode Podcaster Microphone. Would like to start submitting for the weekly script contest and need to gage sound levels - can you hear me - is it clear? Any suggestions are appreciated. Thank you for your time! Cheers, Darla

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7539/script-recording-59508.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You need to get the volume level up. Mostly your recording is around -24dB - if you read the various comments down below regarding levels, you'll see that around -3dB is the preferred level... What is coming through sounds pretty good, btw.

    But normalizing your current recording produces a noise floor around -34dB - way too high. It's not clear how much of that is actual background noise (e.g. computer fan noise) vs. hiss from the preamp or whatever...

    I'm not familiar with the particular microphone you're using, but if it has a gain control you need to try turning it up. If it doesn't have a gain control (either on the device itself or in the software - Volume or Input Volume setting), then moving closer to the mic and/or talking louder may be your only options. If you're using headphones to monitor while you record, you might try turning the headphone level down - this will encourage you to talk louder so that you can hear yourself at the same level in the headphones...

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah, your peak amplitude (level) is at -23db. You'll want to normalize that up to -3db.

    Peer Feedback:

    Darla --
    aside from your recording being very quiet as noted above, I thought your performance was great!
    very nice voice - sounds like it's right in the wheelhouse of female commercial voices.

    Your read might have room for a little tweaking; it sounded a little tentative.
    I think you could hit "easy" and "easier" harder, because that's the key of this read. that switch to a Mac is EASY!

    same with "great way" and "better digital life".

    overall, nice performance.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I am just getting over a cold and feel as if my voice is sounding all right but feedback on this would be good.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Mackintosh-switch.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,

    You sound conversational, good job! Just be careful of your voice going up and down, like a roller coaster. I have been struggling with sounding like a broadcaster/announcer, and also choppiness. Well, practices makes perfect!!

    Hope that you are feeling better!!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, I guess we all have our struggles and I've found that the roller-coaster thing is quite prevalent in my family. It's in all of our conversations and it's a struggle for me to tame it. Yes, I am feeling better. Also, I think you're doing quite well in your focus on not sounding like a radio announcer.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    This is a potential section of an e-learning/educational demo about chronic pain. (I would prefer no music, but let me know if a MB would be preferable). Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-84083.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The read is nice and up - almost too much so. Every one of your sentences (or sentence fragments) have virtually the came arc of inflection to them. It's far from sing-songy, but there is a definite pattern to the delivery.

    For instance, take the last sentence. It's kind of a dire warning - or at least a warning - to the lasting (cost) effectiveness of the health care system. So, it needs a certain weight or gravitas placed on it. This was a little too "flippant" or glib sounding in conjunction to the rest of the narrative, which sounded the same (inflection wise). (That's a little over-stating it, I guess.)

    I would suggest to slow it down just a titch (a technical term). The numbers are important, so they need a little stress and more clarity. Example: "...between 40 and 70 million..." got a little rushed and smushed (another technical term) into "...between fordyansevendy million..." Nothing wrong with rounding off the T's, but a little separation between the two major numbers would bring the point home.

    There is some "live-ness" to the recording. Can't tell or decide whether it's due to your recording environment or applied noise reduction. Obvious that you either edited out the breaths or used a de-breather (or noise gate) to eliminate their sounds. In either case, the de-breather didn't catch all of the breath's associated sounds - there are some remnants, sometimes before and sometimes after a breath. Other times, bits of words are clipped at the front or off the back. Both of these are very, very slight but noticeable to my aged ears. The result is that the sentences and sentence fragments become choppy - not a fault of the delivery, but the editing or processing.

    Peer Feedback:

    As James said: there's certainly a liveliness to the sound. It's not from a reverb, it's room. And I also agree that your tone is a bit too "up" for the material. No need to go sour (or dour) in tone, but perhaps less peppy and a little more 'factual' ...conveying important information that's not a sales type pitch.

    Definitely slow it down. James mentions a pattern in the sentences...it's less than 30s, so whether that would continue in a longer read(?)...it would be problematic then. Sometimes people hit a stride after the first few sentences that breaks such a pattern and becomes more conversational in nature. But it's best to not have a discernible pattern to break FROM. I'll leave the editing notes to James. He covered it and I have to get back to editing myself.

    Peer Feedback:

    Once again great and precise advice from James and Tom. This was a first take recording. I knew ahead of time I wasn't as close to the mic as I normally am. I neglected to use my background blankets and window shade that is sound proofing. This produced more room noise and "live-ness" like you mentioned. Also my editing skills have been more of a challenge lately because of a recent hand injury. After a few more times listening to my recording, I believe your comments and advice about my technique were spot on. I had a hunch it was a tad quick, etc. Always appreciate the tips you guys give and the time you put in to help others. Thanks!

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    Medical E-Learning Module

    Script:

    The triage nurse dons gloves and climbs into the pickup bed next to the patient. The nurse instructs the emergency technician to get a cervical collar, spine board, and additional help. There is active bleeding from numerous facial, chest, and abdominal lacerations (las-­eh-­ray-­shunz). The right arm is covered with a dirty towel, which is saturated with blood.
    The patient is obtunded (ahb-­tun-­dehd) responding to verbal stimulus with moans and unintelligible sounds. Manual cervical stabilization is performed while assessing the airway. Copious amounts of blood and vomitus are present in the oropharynx (oar-­oh-­fair­inks). Without readily available suction, the nurse attempts a mouth sweep with two fingers to clear the airway.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear nicholasjwolf's recording

    This is my first time asking for feedback on an audition outside of Audition Ringers. The client is looking for, "...a confident, engaging, professional and upbeat narrator for 8 medical e-­learning modules." All feedback appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99546/script-recording-94368.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Nicholas!

    My first impression was that your tone was warm, I wanted to continue listening. You handled the technical terms smoothly, and were able to bring character to the script. A script like this could have easily gone flat.

    As for the recording quality it the volume was great, I am new to all of this so I don't even know if it is a thing, but I am very aware of mouth clicks, I do not know how to edit them out yet, or even reduce them in the first place. I heard them here but it was still very well done.

    Great job!

    ~Andi~

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    Medical Narration Demo Script

    Script:

    (Music)
    It is likely that loss of O-glycosylation at Thr 178… increases susceptibility of fibroblast growth factor-23… to proteolytic degeneration,… resulting in low serum levels of fibroblast growth factor-23. … …Mice that completely lack fibroblast growth factor-23 …develop severe phosphate-retention phenotypes …characterized by extensive soft tissue calcification and hyperphosphatemia.

    (Hospital ambience)
    Child: Can I play at recess?
    Yes. But if you start to feel dizzy, then you need to have somebody take you to the nurse right away. OK?
    Child: OK.

    (Techy bouncing molecules type music)
    Here, …a GABA transmitter molecule,… marked in blue,… has attached to the beta unit of the GABA receptor. … The binding twists the receptor …and opens the channel to enable chloride ions ..to enter the neuron.

    …Granulocytes…Lymphocytes…and Monocytes… There are three types of granulocytes… Neutrophils, Eosinophils, and Basophils. Each performs a specific function in the immune process.

    (music)
    Your duties may include
    • Examining patients’ teeth and gums
    • Taking and developing X-Rays
    • And teaching patients how to practice good oral hygiene on their own

    (sfx)
    OK, Let’s see how well you remember some of the information we’ve covered. Drag and drop each blood component …and each blood product… onto their corresponding group. (Some sort of sound effect that indicates that the student dragged and dropped)

    (Music with stinger at end)
    As in all previous studies comparing the relative efficacy of cimetidine and ranitidine in the inhibition of acid secretion in the Zollinger-Ellison syndrome and other gastric hypersecretory states, this study shows that ranitidine is more potent. Ranitidine was both three times more potent in the acute inhibition of basal acid secretion and in the long term.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear drmariah's recording

    Hi Randye, Based on almost 2 years trainings and demos, I have been guided toward becoming a Narration Voice Over Artist. I enjoy it very much and because I have a Doctorate in Psychology it may give me leading edge in Medical Narration. This demo you are evaluating was done after coaching in Medical Narration. It cost me a lot of money but I do like to invest a lot of myself and resources into where I place my attention. But I do not want to kid myself into thinking I have what it takes to become a successful Voice Over Artist in Medical Narration. I realize there may be more training in the future. Here are my questions: 1. How do I fare in the industry based on your experience and knowledge of what a good Medical Voice Over Artist sounds like? Do I sound too amateur? 2. Any specific issues in this demo would really need to be corrected, for example: PROBLEM WORDS: 'TRANSMITTER' 'EFFICACY' 'OH YEAH' WITH KID Should be 'YES' 3. Is there room noise on demo? Enginneer did have the sound proof pads up. I am not sure how many questions I get, but please take your time to answer all that you can. Don't hold back because of fees. I would be willing to pay you more because this is very important for me. I very much appreciate hearing comments from a very experience super pro in the industry . Thank you verrrry much! Dr. Mariah Larkin

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2574/script-recording-28421.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    to me: this was really excellent. I WOULD either take the music bed down a notch on the second sample or change it....there were some sounds from the music which actually sounded like mouth noise! Your performance was outstanding and your investment in time and training shine through. Great work.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with Tom... one of the best performances of a medical read. Your diction is spot on, the tone and pace as well as the diversity of things you did called attention to your ability to do a wide range of voice types specific to that market.

    I didn't like the way the first one was engineered. You could hear the edits, the music was competing against your voice and it seemed to strain the pace. It threw me off at first, and because it was the first sound, I imagined the rest would be like that. And Tom again points out that the music in some parts sounds like mouth noise and it's distracting. The reads are great, I'd re-engineer the first 2 or remove.

    That said, the rest of it was stellar. IMHO the best thing to do would be fix or remove clip (Part) 1 and 2. And not because of the read. Nodo420@gmail.com

    Afternote... I listened again and I couldn't hear the edits... So Tom's suggestion is the best one probably. Do bring that music down, he says a notch, I say 2, and/or change the music. My call would be changing it.

    Audition winning voice and delivery. Props to you and your coach

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Loren Phillips's recording

    working on sibilance control and the read.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-82403/script-recording-64348.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Right out the gate let me say , I enjoy the sound of your voice. It's very friendly and personable. What bothered me was how rushed you sounded. Slow down and let us soak in the sound of your voice. Try to edit out those breath sounds as well. Overall good job w/ room for improvement. Can't wait to hear more from you.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Jerry for the straight feedback (I need it!) and kind encouragement. I'll work on the pace.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the conversational tone. Really nice.

    Some whistling sibilance. I'm curious how one eliminates that other than knocking down that exact range of frequencies with processing.

    Tempo seemed good to start and then you raced a little in the second-to-last sentence.

    Nits:

    "Hi there. To have the best possible experience with MiniUSA.com"

    You dip down at ".com", which would make sense if it was the end of the thought, but it's really continuing so I'd stay mid-range.

    You do the same after "plug-in", and again, I would stay mid-range.

    LOTS to like, so I needed to nit-pick. :)

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    Good one, great voice, good pacing - but do edit those breaths out!

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia - thx, I did find that whistling freq at ~10.6K. Need to work on that at the source, however. I appreciate the feedback, it's very helpful.

    thx tradbrit - that's the last of my breathing to be exported!

    LP

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm trying to practice with this, and that second-to-last sentence is kind of a killer, isn't it? Hm...

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    Morton Arboretum Pt.1

    Script:

    Hello! Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear VoxWerks's recording

    Just getting back to the mic after a tooth extraction, so I need the practice...feedback welcome!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113645/script-recording-96748.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it sounded great. The pacing was good and it held my interest. The only thing I noticed was a slight popping on one of your P's and the word enter sounded like "inter."

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Buddy Bortz's recording

    Working with a new Audio Technica AT2020 USB+ mic.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95930/script-recording-91159.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Overall, I think it was a good read. The interpretation sounded very informative. The overall quality of the recording was good, but the quality really improved towards the end of the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    The AT2020 USB mic is a very serviceable mic. And USB style mics have gotten better as far as sound quality goes in recent years. Mostly they're used for podcasts. And since they're using your internal sound card rather than a true pre amp (they include their own pre amp in in the guts of the mic), you might not be getting the full dynamic range of your voice in the recording.

    I have it's bigger brother, the AT2035 with a Scarlett 2i2 interface, which picks up a little more "body" of the voice.

    The first guide's delivery was very informative and the pacing was nice as well. Just a little over-articulated - in that it was obvious that you made a concerted effort to get those T's in on "Morton" and "Wheaton". But then why not on "Arboretum"? Because it would sound forced and unnatural. I would submit that a glottal "Mor(t)'n" and "Wea(t)'n" would sound more naturally "conversational". You also said "howduhgit" instead of 'how to get". Just some things to be aware of.

    I could be wrong (I often am), but it sounded like you either used a noise gate or de-breather. Either way, the processing missed some breaths and clipped the ends off of some words. The settings for either are a very delicate and neither are totally foolproof - you're going to have to listen carefully and adjust and/or surgically edit some things regardless.

    Take a beat or a beat and a half before going into the second narrative. It almost sounded like a continuation of the first one. If I weren't reading along, I wouldn't have known that it was a different thing, then my brain would be trying to make that connection and possibly miss the first part of the separate message.

    There was a lot of mouth noise to this one and the levels were a little erratic, especially the last two sentences. Same noise gate/de-breather problem here - clipping off the end of some of the words.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    2 Virtual Tour/E-Learning Scripts

    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ChiSarah0314's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9027/script-recording-26596.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the friendly and warm delivery. I hear a little "ambiance" to your recording that comes across as a hissing of the background noise in your room. One thing I've learned is along with noise reduction, you can clean your audio a little extra by silencing between the phrases. I'm wondering if you have "normalized" the audio as well, this brings a little more "presence" to your read.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Script from Edge Studio's 4,869 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > eLearning & Education

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Daniel.f.purcell's recording

    Finally got my mic setup working...I think. Plus returning after a brief break.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Virtual Tour Morton.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Tricky piece of copy - lots of lists and instructions,

    After the word "Arboretum", I heard a little lip smack. No way to avoid closing your lips on an M. The trick is not to smack your lips as you take the next breath. Or you could edit out that tiny spike in the wave form.

    That first list. You did something very technically correct in giving each thing a different inflection, but it sounded a little stilted and unnatural to a "conversational" tone.

    The word "tour" belies a certain regionalism (both times). It almost sounded like "tore" instead of "2er".

    This next list is a killer. What do you do with it? You pre-asked the question where there is no question mark (after "screen"). Save the upward inflection for where the question mark is actually written. One way to handle the list is to literally physically point your finger at each item, one by one, as you say them - ending with the question.

    The next sentence (thought) was broken up by taking a breath in the middle of it. If you need a breath for that long sentence, I would suggest taking it after "highlighted".

    (pause)

    Just a fraction too long. I thought you were done.

    A little p-popping on "page" and "pane", but I think you know how to correct that.

    Nice job after your "brief break".

    Peer Feedback:

    James,

    Thank you very much!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear WhatBobThisBob's recording

    Another raw file. No accents this time...just me. Considering the clip is raw, I'd still like to know if the general sound quality is good so I know whether I have a good baseline to start the production from. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95410/script-recording-78107.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound is a bit hollow. Ideally you would want to treat your recording space to reduce echo. You also have a good bit of mouth noise that is distracting at times.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with all the above points, and want to add that I think you're a little too energetic on this one. A calmer, more soothing delivery for a virtual tour of trees seems like it might have fit better. You will be speaking over the video, which should really be the highlight, so you need to imagine the video that the audience will be seeing, and then speak to them (through the mic) as though they were very close to you... about as close as they might be to their computer screen.

    This seems more high energy sports museum tour to me lol :)

    Not that this can't be a genre for you (which should also be about what you WANT to do) just some delivery points to consider.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback. I have a foam reflection screen, but I guess there's still too much echo left in the room. I've read about a plug in called Deverb. has anyone used that before? Now...regarding the read itself. I wasn't even thinking this could have a video with it. That's really a great point, Bean. I was envisioning kind of an animated screen character (maybe done in Flash) bouncing around the web page pointing out the things as I said them. So...that brings up a basic question. In the absence of more direction/context for the read, how do you decide which way to read it? I could see it working Bean's way, my way, or several other ways depending on the final use context. How do you decide which way to go if this was an audition and all they gave you was the script?

    Peer Feedback:

    I haven't used the plug in. May work great, but I would doubt it is better than treating the room if you are able. I recently moved my stuff into a walk-in closet with clothes hanging up and 36 square feet of Auralex foam ( http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/B000E1U9ZG/ref=oh_aui_detailpage_o03_s0... ) covering most of the remainder of the wall/ceiling. I couldn't believe the improvement from my much larger room, where I had the foam hanging.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, that's where the genre, and dissecting the copy comes into play. It's a virtual tour, so you know there's a visual to go with it. That's a cue to lower your voice, someone's on a screen, next to their speakers, or on headphones, You don't need to bark at them. Just talk as though you were over their shoulder explaining the action that was happening. You should probably try to visualize the action as you're speaking it. You should do that with all copy.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're talking about one of those MudFlap thingies with the shell and the foam, consider that that only deals with reflection bouncing back into the mic from behind it, not the reflection coming in from behind you as you speak. I had one, I sold it on ebay.

    Even though you're directing your voice into the mic, sound is a bit omni-directional (especially the lower frequencies - that's why you an place a sub-woofer just about anywhere in a room, whereas the tweeters pump out a more or less directional sound and tend to be directionally focused). So whatever frequencies are bouncing off the surfaces behind you (and above and below you, ceiling and floor) are the reflections that are being picked up.

    I recently went to a Harbor Freight store and picked up some wool packing blankets. (They're really cheap. They also stink for a while.). I have constructed my own booth that is basically a room within a room. It's pretty quiet in there, but I was still getting some reflection, even with foam. I stapled those blankets to the walls and the door and put the foam on the ceiling (the floor is carpeted) and it made a huge difference - significantly cut down the reflections and dropped my noise floor another 5dB or so.

    If constructing your own booth is not a possibility, I would suggest making or getting some simple panels (like office partitions or a folding screen or PVC piping) and form a simple frame with those blankets as sound absorbing material. Then surround yourself with them when you record.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bob --
    it's WAY better to acoustically treat a home studio booth to remove noise, than try to remove it with a deverb plugin. they are tricky to set up, can introduce a bunch of distortion and artifacts into your track, and even when done correctly can't match a quiet recording space....

    there's tons of resources online and in this forum regarding creating a quiet recording space. it's not expensive.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the comments all. I will be focusing on figuring out a way to quiet the room down. My current space is only temporary (in our guest room) until one of the kids moves out and I can claim that room as my new official studio. So I'll probably be looking at putting together a temporary booth inside the room for now.

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    Moving Image Arts Bachelor Program

    Script:

    Cinematic storytelling is at the heart of our Moving Image Arts bachelor's program, which offers a comprehensive, hands-on, four-year curriculum that integrates film, video, and digital production with critical studies and writing. This program complements the university's expansive liberal arts core curriculum, which is predicated on a breath of knowledge that all educated artists should possess. Our goal is to educate the total filmmaker, while also providing the opportunity to focus on a
    specific discipline within the craft.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear desperta82's recording

    Trying out first recording and first submission of the feedback forum.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4705/script-recording-26954.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty good for a first shot.. You read well and have a nice voice. Lets start with the delivery. You need to practice the places you were hesitant or figure out re-phrasing. The phrase "This program complements the university's expansive liberal arts core curriculum, which is predicated on a breath of knowledge that all educated artists should possess.," is choppy and doesn't break smoothly. Also, you stumbled on "...opportunity to focus" but kept charging to the end.

    If I mess up a phrasing point, I look at it, take a deep breath and go back to the last sentence making a noise at the beginning so I know where to edit. But if you stumble of feel awkward, the listener, however much they enjoy it will focus on that. Another thing, if you have a part that is not right, go re-record that part and edit it into the final mix. It's easier than trying to fix a mistake or letting something sound strange.

    Recording quality, there's a really loud hum that you have to find and eliminate, and make sure your mouth to mic distance is good. Couldn't tell over the hum. Keep it up, you have some real potential.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, and this read is a great starting point for the Director to tune it.

    So, playing the role of the Director, I would tell you this:
    I think you need to do a little less reading, and a little more "acting" in the piece. I really felt read to...it seemed sort of flat and emotionless - as if I was hearing myself reading a syllabus, or something. No problem -- time for "take 2"

    Technical points:
    the background distortion was distracting, but can be overlooked if you're really only after feedback on performance. I think it's a combination of room noise, monaural recording (need a better mic?), and perhaps a high level of mp3 compression, which is usually the cause of that "ringing" sound. Definitely eliminate it before submitting auditions.

    I thought you misread "liberal...arts". "Liberal Arts" is a title.
    The pacing wasn't too bad -- maybe a little rushed.
    Keep an eye on ending phrases on the down-beat...that can become too repetitive and choppy.

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    Nasa Space Science: A Violent History Of Time

    Script:

    From mother Earth, the night sky can look peaceful and unchanging, but the universe as seen in gamma-rays is a place of sudden and chaotic violence. Using gamma-ray telescopes, astronomers witness short but tremendously intense explosions called gamma-ray bursts, and there is nothing more powerful.
    No one is sure what causes gamma-ray bursts. Favored possibilities include the collision of two neutron stars or a sort of super-supernova that occurs when extremely massive stars explode. One thing is certain: gamma-ray bursts happen in galaxies far, far away -- so far away that the distances are called "cosmological," beyond ordinary comprehension.
    Think about this: When you look up at the night sky, you are looking at the ultimate history book – one that goes back to the very beginning of what we call time. And each star is a chapter in the book. You are not really seeing the stars as they are now. You are looking at stars as they used to be when their light left them long ago. And the deeper we peer into space, the farther back in time we are looking. In fact, light from the galaxies farthest away is billions of years old.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shower_soprano34's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-130555/script-recording-97252.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a really pleasant voice, and actually sound very authoritative about the subject. I believe it. There is some mouth noise and sibilance that you could process out, but it's not too bad. The recording sorely lacks the lower end of the spectrum, and needs to be filled out with some boost to the lower-mid and bass ranges, but at least it's nice and clean. You've also got too much hiss in the background, and combined with some clips or clicks in the audio, it almost sounds like an old record player. Maybe your reading is a little fast, too.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a very clear, youthful voice. I would like to hear you sounding more enthusiastic/upbeat about the topic. You don't need to take it too far, keep it casual, just so as not to let phrases like "there is nothing more powerful" be too flat. Your pacing was good overall, but some natural short pauses to bring out specific points would help here, such as honoring the comma at "Using gamma-ray telescopes," where it seems a bit rushed.

    You should seek out a better microphone that better represents your tonal qualities.

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    New Home Buyer Guide

    Script:

    Suppose you want to purchase a house or apartment, and like most of us, you'll need a mortgage. Then you need to keep listening ... Because in the next 15-minutes, we'll show you how to get a mortgage, without any headaches. All you'll need to do is follow along with this audio-guide, watch your screen, and check off some boxes. Ready? To begin, click "house," "apartment," or "condo."

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear larryboy's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4446/script-recording-30518.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    A contest entry...and you've entered. Let's see how you do first.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read, I liked it and felt it was conversational and easy in it's presentation.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read Larry.....I like the conversational style! That's what I have to work on!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I especially liked the pacing. In control of the session without being preachy.
    Nice read!

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    Obesity

    Script:

    Obesity can affect you emotionally, as well as physically.

    Obesity may lead to:

    - Decreased self-esteem

    - Depression, anxiety, and other mental disorders

    - Social and professional discrimination. Obese individuals may face bias and stigma in many aspects of their life.

    People with obesity may have body pain and other health issues that can make it difficult to do the activities they enjoy including socializing with friends and family.

    These psychological and social factors may lead to isolation and loneliness.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Skmigs's recording

    So I previously uploaded a recording after using the de-clicker on Izoptope, and all heard vocal distortions. (Hopefully the my speakers will be unpacked this weekend and I can hear what everyone's talking about!) In the meantime, I turned down the sensitivity of the plug-in. My questions are: can you still hear distortion? And: how else can I get rid of clicks mid-word? I can manually edit out the ones in between, but in the middle of words this is near-impossible. I've used sprays, green apples, no caffeine/dairy, warm water… Now with the sensitivity turned down, I can still hear clicks… but how annoying is it for the listener? THANK YOU so much, you all are an incredibly help and resource to me.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-94626/script-recording-86644.mp3

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Skmigs,

    Thank you for choosing me to do your checkup. While I do hear a couple of random clicks in the audio, the overall quality is a bigger problem. Unfortunately, I would not be able to use this audio if it were sent to me for use in a production. This could partly be because you are trying to use a de-clicker, but my guess is that it is due to equipment and environment. The sound is muddy and a hollow sounding. I am hearing distortion which again could be due to the plugin being in the chain, or because you are over modulating (you are too loud) the mic or preamp. This would be easy to do on a low quality mic or preamp. Because I do not know which gear you are using, again it is hard for me to say where to focus your energy in solving these problems.

    Clicks can be removed in the middle of words. You need to zoom in on your wave forms tightly. Identify the click and remove the peak and valley of that part of the waveform. It takes practice and a DAW that allows you to zoom in that tightly. You should not be trusting software to do this for you. Software does not listen, it simply removes things based on mathematical values. This means it will remove much of the good stuff as well as the bad. This is a process that should be done manually while listening very closely. Proper mic technique can help eliminate many clicks, pops and other anomalies that you want to reduce during recording. Place yourself 6 - 8 inches from the mic, position it at an angle roughly similar to the angle of your nose and talk past it rather than into it.

    I'm sorry that this probably wasn't what you had hoped to hear, but it sounds like you have a nice voice, it should be represented better and more accurately than this recording offers. I hope this feedback helps.

    Dan Friedman

    Thanks again.

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 15, 2016 at 2:36PM

    Peer Feedback:

    You can get rid of the clicks that the declicker misses by using Spectral Repair in the RX Audio Editor. Move the Waveform/spectrogram opacity slider all the way to the right and zoom in on the time scale til you've got about 3 seconds of audio in the window. The clicks will show up as vertical bars in the waveform. Use the Time-Frequency selection tool to select the bar. If the click is in a black area, Attenuate works best. Otherwise Replace. If you've got RX5 (not sure about previous releases), you can use the Instant Process feature. But do make sure you listen to what it does, because sometimes it makes things worse (ends up sounding like an echo or something)...

    Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Whether you have the Spectral Repair will depend on the version of the RX suite you've purchased. I don't have it.

    Mid-word clicks, if not softened by De-clicker become something you have to learn to identify in the waveform. First of all, make sure you're properly hydrated before reading to keep these problems to a minimum. Also practice techniques at the mic to keep lip smacks and clicks to a minimum. But there are almost always going to be one or two in any lengthy read.

    If you listen carefully and identify a word where a click is identifiable, zoom in on that word...the waveform. You'll then find the syllable it's in...zoom in as far as you can and you'll see a very jagged "lil' bastard' lurking on that wave form that's very different than the rest of it. If you wave form is smooth and there's a click, you'll see a very sudden disturbance in the smoothness. If you're in a part of a syllable where the waveform is rather "up and down" but not clicky...but suddenly a click gets in there, you'll see where that "up and down form" has a pronounced thicker waveform with additional "jagged" peaks ON the form.

    Once you've learned how to ID them, you can try what I do. I try and find peaks or valleys on either side of the click and highlight the wave form from peak to peak or valley to valley so that if I delete that click, the waveform will almost be the same at the in and out points of the deletion. This works 95% of the time for me. The segment will be so short, no one will notice it. The other 5% are usually tongue flaps on "L" syllables that I might have to re-read the phrase and punch it in. Most of the time, the little search, find, delete works for me.

    Some DAWS will let you "draw" as if with a pencil to correct the waveform. None of the DAWs I've tried and/or have have that capability.

    Peer Feedback:

    What version of RX do you have, Tom? I'm pretty sure spectral reapir has been part of the stand-alone app since at least RX2. Looks like they made it a plugin in RX3, then undid that in RX4.

    Peer Feedback:

    Since I am still a wannabe, I hardly feel qualified to critique. The voice and diction made for a pleasant and easy listen. The previous respondents probably have far better trained ears than do I.

    Peer Feedback:

    4. Beyond that. I refuse to answer any further inquiries due to my refusal to incriminate myself for being an under-utilizer. Dammit. Was just using the plug-ins.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks all. As usual, this is very helpful. Sundance, I will look at the editor function today and see if I can figure that out. Tom, also appreciate the tips for manually deleting them. I've tried before, but I am hoping with the details you added I get a better eye for it.

    Unfortunately, the professional feedback from Edge still heard distortion and poor sound quality in general. Maybe even my mic and pre-amp being subpar. It's discouraging, but better to know this now than waste my time continuing to send in auditions. I have to get through one more move in March, and then I'm going to hire someone to help me create a studio space and check my equipment. (I use a Rhode NT1A and Scarlett 211. Not the top-of-the-line, I know, but high enough quality I thought I would be OK. ). Wondering if I head to B&H they could make see if the mic was damaged in one of the moves... never heard any bad reviews of that mic before?

    Not giving up. Thanks again everyone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok..cranking up my headphones higher than I usually use them, you CAN hear some kind of ringing in your vocal track...almost sounds like a music stand resonating slightly....and it goes away between phrases.

    There's NOTHING wrong with the Scarlet input you're using and the Rode mic is pretty well regarded in the mid-price range of condenser mics. It's got very low self-noise and it's not too sharp in the upper registers either.

    What specifically did they criticize about your sound? Care to share that input?

    Peer Feedback:

    To be fair, he didn't know what equipment I was using, he just theorized it could be an issue.

    He said overall quality was problematic: muddy and hollow-sounding. Unusable.
    He could hear distortion. This he didn't know if it was the plug-in, me being too loud (as I've mentioned previously, I'm actually too soft-spoken), or my equipment... adding on that it would easily occur with a subpar amp and/or mic.

    Hm. I have no idea what the ringing could be.
    Outside of the pillows and moving blankets I have in the temp studio, I am using a porta booth. Maybe that's hurting more than helping?

    Peer Feedback:

    A port-a-booth isn't going to create distortion but might allow room noise to still enter into the sound chain. Things have to be considered such as how you address the mic (distance from, angle from front of your face, etc) and what your raw sound is like.

    Chasing the best sound within a given space can be difficult sometimes. It might be worth your while to contact George Whittam and see if he can evaluate your sound with fuller knowledge of how you're doing everything.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks. You're right -- at this point, George would be the best next step. Will probably wait until the next (and final!) move in March so I'm not wasting money evaluating a space I only have for 6 weeks. Will practice in the meantime getting rid of those clicks.

    You're such an asset to this community, I really appreciate your input!

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    Parent's Day

    Script:

    It might not seem so at 2 in the morning, but maybe you’ve already noticed: kids grow up so quickly. In the next 4 and a half minutes, we’ll show how to make every moment count.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LisaRolanda's recording

    Curious to know if I'm sounding any better!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-88986/script-recording-73232.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It is pleasant voice to listen to and very articulate (although "we'll" sounded more like "will" than "wheel" - just a touch of a regionalism). You also sound like you know something about parenting.

    The delivery is a little sing-songy (lots of pitch modulation) which makes the message sound just a touch phoney (sell-y or announcery) and not really (say it along with me) "conversational".

    Flatten it out a little (with narrower range of pitch), smile and talk to me (as I am a nervous new parent) reassuringly with the voice of experience to tell me that I'm in for the time of my life!

    From beginning to end there is a subtle shift in attitude. From the pain-in-the-butt sleep deprivation a parent experiences with a newborn to that same parent who will barely remember that by the time they send their kid off to college (although I suspect that this child probably isn't going to age that far in only 4 1/2 minutes). Heck of a lot to cram into two sentences.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, thanks so much! Your feedback was really helpful and clear. You nailed the regionalism! I tried correcting it but just couldn't quite get it! Thanks so much!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sometimes correcting those pesky regionalisms are as simple as crossing out the problematic word and writing in another (i.e. "wheel" for "we'll" - "2" for "to" instead of "ta" - "4" for "for" instead of "fer"). It tricks your brain into forming the word more correctly to the Neutral American accent.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    Very pleasant tone.
    - touzet -

    Peer Feedback:

    Speed it up just a touch. Well done.
    Mike W.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hey Lisa! Did not forget you. In fact got another chance to hear your soothing and resonant voice on this spot.

    Tiz a tough spot to convey all the feelings and message in just two sentences. It appears that you have the softness and 'Parents, we've all been there' approach in the beginning of your story; but that is where we lose the 'mom' voice qualities and start hearing the reader/announcer/promo type pitch.

    Ways to alleviate this tendency (and we all have this tendency!) is to linger on the phrasing of your words within each thought of this spot: Here goes (comments in parenthesis)

    It might not seem so at 2 in the morning (almost 'roll you eyes up to the sky/ almost like yeah, you really aren't going to walk with me on this theory / but trust me...)

    , but maybe (hang onto the word maaaay be with a slight pause or beat before you continue...)you’ve already noticed: (then the 'ta-da' slightly more observant or authoritative voice with a smile though saying,...)kids grow up so quickly.

    In the next 4 and a half minutes, (this is a build on time...in the next 4 and a half minutes...show how to make EVERY moment ...count) we’ll (a slight regionalism on the we'll (not w-i-l-l ........approach more as in weil we-il ) show how to make every moment count. This is where you can again come back to your much more laid back yet down to earth voice and include that understanding smile that all Parents seem to have .

    And even non-your head when you say this. / makes a huge difference in the output of what we hear as a listener.

    Keep your tone much more conversational not so sing-song or leading into a bit of a pitch - / remember you are also a 'parent' in this story and sharing that saga with your peers...and linger of some of those words that will catch a parent's ear...(MOMENTS) That's what's going to tug at their heart and heart strings - that and of course your warm and smiling voice with a call to action on watching those next 4 and half minutes of your presentation/ video/ story.

    Makes sense?

    BTW. (by the way) Audio is fine - no background nor ambient noise
    However the invitation is to have more enjoyment with your delivery of this message to the listener and include a 'wink' of that 'yep, I've been there myself' dose of reality.

    Adding in those tweeks will make a huge difference in both this spot and future stories from your mouth to our ears! Keep up the good work!

    Best,
    Marjorie Kouns

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach August 4, 2014 at 6:08PM

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Marjorie and everyone for your help! I appreciate the help!

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    Power Education for Females

    Script:

    But a shift towards greener energy is under way, as policymakers seek to reduce carbon emissions from electricity generation and improve local air quality – providing sustainable energy to growing populations.
    Drag each icon to the correct category and then click Submit.
    And click on the highlighted terms for more information.
    Click on the links to learn more about electricity measurements, terminology and the discovery of electromagnetic induction.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Blair S's recording

    This was an audition I uploaded yesterday on Voices123. They didn't give me any score. I understood the material well, I thought I had the right emotion. Am I still too sing songy? What is wrong?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106515/script-recording-92579.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't subscribe to V123, so I don't know how they "score" things. But here are some observations.

    The first really noticeable thing is the mouth noise - mostly tongue, cheek and nasal clicking. If you zoom in on the wave form, you can actually see their squiggles and spikes. Plugins like de-clickers and de-cracklers are only so effective on them and could cause sonic artifacts. So, as a "recording quality" issue, that alone may disqualify you for the job. From what I understand, most of the jobs awarded on the P2P sites would require a raw, but clean recording devoid of plosive pops, mouth noise clicks and lip smacks. Many clients may also require simple editing and breath sound removal (you left one in after "generation"). That leaves less work to be done by an engineer/mixer on their end. Some clients may even require a fully edited, processed and mastered recording; sometimes with provided music and sound FX, ready for broadcast. So, that's the technical stuff.

    You have a pleasant voice and smooth delivery style. "Emotion" is a loaded and nebulous word. Pick something more specific. Comforting. Caring. Angry. Somber. Informative. Sexy. Upbeat. And also realize that no single "emotion" may cover the entirety of the text. Oftentimes there are combinations and/or shifts in "emotion" depending on the text. Not so much here though.

    IMHO, for an instructional piece like this, there needs to be a bit more articulation. This was sort of half and half. For instance: In the first you left a nice separation and double T on "shift toward", but "electricity" came out "elektrizidee" and "quality" came out "kwalidee". Small things, but they may be important to the client.

    Peer Feedback:

    A lot of clicks. You really have a noise problem. If you clean that up, your recording will be much, much better. Like your voice. You sound warm and cheerful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Decent read, but it was a bit thin - weak, if you will. I get the same result when I'm close to the microphone and, for some reason, in a quiet mood. I've found that backing up from the mic puts a psychological distance between me and the listener and forces me to talk in a more normal volume and projection. Other than that - pacing was fine. James R nailed the rest in his comment. I look forward hearing more from you. You have a nice voice that seems well-suited for this type of content.

    Peer Feedback:

    Interestingly, I didn't hear any clicks in your slate at the end. What did you do differently when you recorded the slate?

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear amottram's recording

    This is a sample fof the same read from two different mic's. ANy feedback comparing the two is welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-11215/script-recording-30845.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The first mic definitely sounds more open and clear. The second sample seemed to compress your sound somewhat...less air at the upper end certainly. It also seemed to drain some depth from your voice.

    If you used the exact same sound chain EXCEPT for the mics, the first sounds much nicer to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tom. I've had mixed reviews here at home, I hope to hear some more opinions here. It was the same sound chain with the mics going through a MinPort Pro. I should probably try them with my dbx 286 and Edirol UA-25 as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    MicPort Pro that is.

    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy Amo,

    I think the first mic is the way to go. The second one seems to draw the life out of you....

    Regards,

    SteveO

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks SteveO, I thought so as well. So far I have a split decision based on feedback here and elswehere. I hope to hear more.

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    Prophylaxis Interview

    Script:

    In your opinion, how will prophylaxis and periodontology develop in the coming years?

    I think that there will continue to be a number of useful tools available in prophylaxis, such as these contra-angle polishing handpicks. The contra-angle polishing handpick is ergonomically shaped and has a considerably smaller, shorter head. There are also a large number of polishing caps with outer ribs, which fit the tooth perfectly, and come in various strengths from soft to hard. There have also been a number of developments in terms of hygiene. We have a handpick to which we can affix a single-use polishing attachment, which of course is hugely advantageous when treating high-risk patients for example.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear paulafaye's recording

    This is my first real audition on a pay to play site. I want to be sure I can do it and it is the best possible.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-66766/script-recording-96309.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    If this has not been published as of yet, you are going to be in violation of the user agreements of the p2p sites. All of them have Non-Disclosure Agreements which prohibit the reposting/sharing of their scripts and especially if the job is still not posted/used/published.

    Peer Feedback:

    How do I get feedback for my audition if I don't include the script? It will not be reprinted on the Edge website, but there is no other way to get feedback. I genuinely want to know this as I have never done this before, only posted practice pieces so far. Thank you!

    Peer Feedback:

    When you posted this, under the place where you type the script in in Step 4, did you uncheck the box that says "Add this script to Edge Studio's script library."?

    It's an easy thing to miss. but if you didn't uncheck the box, the script automatically gets added to the Edge Script Library.

    Edge hasn't significantly changed their website in quite a long time, so there is still an "Audition" category in Step 2. The trend now-a-days is that scripts are propitiatory to the client/business that you're auditioning for. And, lately, they have been attaching NDA's (Non-Disclosure Agreements), which means that you aren't allowed to disseminate the script for public consumption until after the spot has aired. Then all's fair.

    P2P's are also cracking down on this. Check your agreement. If you are in violation, you could potentially be banned from that P2P.

    I work through an agent, and EVERY audition I get from them has an NDA attached.

    Be very careful.

    For auditions, I would suggest submitting your read (but not the script) for Private Pro Feedback - more or less as a coaching session.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you jamesromick. I did uncheck the box to add to the script library, and am very careful when I post any script to be sure to verify if it should or should not be added to the library. I dod also go to the particular p2p site and read their legal info, etc and did not find anything about non-disclosure. I also contacted Edge for their input on this matter. Again thank you for your help.

    Peer Feedback:

    OK. All of that said. Here are some of my impressions. Take 'em or leave 'em as much as you choose.

    First question is: Did you apply any processing FX to this recording?
    A couple of things struck my ear right off the bat.
    The S's aren't necessarily sibilant as they are sharp and whistle-like. That could be the mic. The overall sound is also kind of dull - in that it doesn't capture the richness of your natural voice. Again, IMHO, it's a mic issue. May I ask what kind of mic you are using?

    A little mouth noise here and there. And much of, what I call, nasal clicking. It happens when the soft pallet drops and causes more of the sound and air stream to come through your nose. You'll hear it on hard K sounds and N's and some M's.

    The volume also seems a little inconsistent. Example: The phrase, ",,, such as these contra-angle..." seemed to start with a "bump up" in volume. Can't tell if it was from you getting closer to the mic and/or talking a little louder, or from an edit where that happened. Seems to me the former more than the latter because it sounds like a straight record - all in one take. And if that is the case, good on you for being able to do that with such complicated copy.

    Overall, the read is good, but not quite polished. The intent and inflections are good, but it still sounds a little unconnected. But this stuff is rather "dry", so maybe that's OK. But I get the impression that you're talking to a general audience of many people and not just to me. A good lecturer personalizes the material with a certain passion for the subject. So, maybe it's that that I hear missing.

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    puppy fun 2

    Script:

    For a great time with your puppy, there’s nothing like a game of fetch. It’s best if you can play it in the park or along the shore, but it can be fantastic fun in the backyard or even the living room, assuming yours isn’t filled with irreplaceable figurines. What’s more, playing active games like fetch teaches a puppy to focus and follow instructions. If your pet has never played before, pique his interest by tossing the fetch toy and demonstrating how to chase after and retrieve it. He’ll master the concept in no time.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/puppy fun 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the animation in your voice, very clear though theres a part you went a bit faster but sincerely a good performance. ;)

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the sense of humor you get. You also have a great tone. The pace does fluctuate a bit so evening that out would be good.
    Thanks for the read.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ecstern's recording

    I’m here to talk to you about the risk of fraud, and indicators that can help you identify that risk. When fraud occurs it leaves and impact. Let’s have a look at how it can cause financial and reputational damage. Recently several employees were caught stealing millions of dollar’s worth of parts from a leading car manufacture’s factory. The elaborate scheme involved several employees in different areas of the factory ordering extra spare parts for their units. Fraud involves one or more persons who intentionally use some type of dishonesty or deception to obtain a personal benefit or cause a financial impact.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113588/script-recording-97785.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I was taught to always "make the next thing sound different from the last thing". You started doing this well at "When fraud occurs, it leaves an impact". It became very conversational at this point and sounded more natural. The intro line did not sound natural. You sounded like you were bored with talking to me. The rest of the read was good, though. Pacing was good. I am not in my studio, so I can't listen with headphones at this time to comment on the audio quality, but can so after work. Thanks for commenting on my read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback megmclachlan. I will try to edit this one and get the first line better, although I was using the technique of asking myself What am I here for?, before starting the first line to respond to the question in a more natural way, (as my instructors told me to do). but it didn't seem to work in this case. Thanks!

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    Running Shoes

    Script:

    There is no perfect running shoe, partly because no two feet are alike, even on the same person. Still, top brands can be comfortable, safe, and effective running mates -- if you know what to look for. This video gives you some practical guidelines to help you find shoes that will serve you well in the long run. If in doubt, don’t buy. Shoes should feel just right in the store. Don’t count on improvements after they’re “broken in.” Take your time to buy. Try to shop when business is slow so you won’t feel embarrassed about trying on many pairs of shoes. Buying in haste is a good way to end up with poorly fitting shoes that can cause injuries.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear brett's recording

    Used my on board mic. Do not have my external mic present at this time. Will for future submissions. This is my first contribution to the FF.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5650/script-recording-24601.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    For a first entry, it's pretty good. Won't address the mic situation..you explained that and it sounded pretty darn clear anyway.

    You border (to my ears and two listens) between good conversational and a tad too precise. Just when I think you're hitting a good conversational stride, you go and hit something a little too sharply. Three different uses of "to" at "if you know what to look for (very precise) and "take your time to buy" (a little looser) and then "Try to shop" (just the right amount of relaxation on "to."

    A very good effort...you have a good voice for this kind of thing for sure. And probably 75% of us who have tried getting into this get the same advice in "try and make it more conversational". Overall, this was a little too precise...but very listenable. I look forward to hearing more.

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    Savage Seas

    Script:

    It may be hard to believe, but our climate today is mild. Since the last Ice Age just 10,000 years ago, the sea and the sky have conspired to keep that ice at bay. The oceans bring us our weather. But more than that, they are part of a vast and mysterious system that keeps our whole climate in balance- a balance that keeps life on earth possible, and can just as easily take it away. The waterspout is a vivid demonstration of sea and sky in partnership; a small example of the volatile system that creates weather on earth. It seems as if the sea is being sucked into space. In fact, the funnel is just a swirling cloud. Only the bottom 20 feet is seawater. Inside there is nothing but air.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    Haven't put anything on the forum in a bit. Just trying to get some practice in. All comments welcome! Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-56764.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Again another nice read. But I would slow it down, almost too fast to follow along. You could also make more of a distinction between the first part and the section that focuses on the waterspout. Recording quality sounds good to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    The pace is just a bit quick, but more noticeable to my ears are the edits at the ends of sentences (breathing edits, I presume) which sounds like an edit that might be done to get more words into a radio spot but sounds very unnatural. Voice is spot on, tone is spot on, recording great. Just give more thought to cutting those pauses so tight.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just a bug-a-boo for me. I like the word "our" to sound like "hour" not "are". The latter sounds to me to be a (midwestern?) regionalism.

    I agree with Kate. You rushed through the copy which doesn't let the thoughts "land" for your listener to process. A few word emphasis (emphasises?) fell oddly to my ear - i.e. the hitting "conspired" so strongly (keep is an important word too) and "seawater" as the operative word instead if "20 feet". I get that there is a contrast between "seawater" and "air", however "20 feet" is a pretty impressive distance - 3 humans tall, if you're avarage height.

    The voice is clear and distinct.

    Peer Feedback:

    You have such a nice voice. I listened a few times and read the other critiques. Tom really described the tight, silent pauses, but maybe also don't hit some of the commas so hard--ignore some punctuation to get more flow to a couple spots, more of a story-telling feel. Love your choices for coloring words.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much for all the comments. Really helpful and appreciated! Marianne

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    Self Esteem Audio Series

    Script:

    If you have a self-esteem problem, you’re not alone. Everyone has some difficulties associated with a lack of self-esteem—feelings of inadequacy, insecurity, depression and behavior that reflect their lack of self-confidence. This audio series will help you gain your confidence, and help you boost the quality of your life.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jothi20@gmail.com's recording

    Comments are most welcome. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7200/script-recording-24416.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    OK, that's sounding much better. Now we've got to fix that mic problem.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Richurd. Any suggestions on the mic problem? You like my Guru now. I will try anything you say.

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't start with the Guru crap.

    Peer Feedback:

    What is the meaning of life, oh wise one? ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I was afraid of that.

    Peer Feedback:

    But, Guru...the more I think I know, the less I realize I know!

    Peer Feedback:

    OK Guru! Namaste! I heard you. I won't start that Guru crap again. Sorry.

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    Self Esteem Audio Series

    Script:

    If you have a self-esteem problem, you’re not alone. Everyone has some difficulties associated with a lack of self-esteem—feelings of inadequacy, insecurity, depression and behavior that reflect their lack of self-confidence. This audio series will help you gain your confidence, and help you boost the quality of your life.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear KMBellVO's recording

    Contest entry - need overall feedback. Supposed to be straightforward, not dramatic or theatrical, one-on-one relaxed presentation. Is it too flat, or does it meet the bill?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6593/script-recording-23517.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Kevin:
    I would agree that it is a bit "flat". Maybe a tone more conversational than sympathetic would work.

    Peer Feedback:

    I understand where you were going with this Kevin. I don't think it had that one-on-one conversational quality. If I was depressed I think I would want to hear some reinforcement and hope at the end of it.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi, Kevin5,

    Nice, calming, clear read.

    Make sure you give your copy a structural review as to beginning, middle, and end. Choose and be clear about the different goals of each of those parts.

    I'd flesh out the connection to one person, preferably someone you know, who would benefit from hearing this. Picture this person at a time of relative need, and perhaps the scenario of a quiet, space in which you're having this conversation.

    This will help to energize your read and better connect you to the words and your objective in saying them. Your color and variety will naturally be enhanced by activating your need to to speak these lines.

    Watch that you differentiate items in a list, such as, "inadequacy, insecurity, depression". Tease out the distinctions among these feelings.

    You have a slightly nasal delivery, so you might work on opening your mouth more, doing yawning and diaphragm exercises, and playing around with different placements of resonance.

    You have a unique and inviting sound!

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach October 7, 2011 at 3:14AM

    Peer Feedback:

    One quick fix that you can make is to limit the sound of breath that we can hear. At first I wasn't sure whether it was a theatrical breath or if you just actually needed some air. If it wasn't intentional, one way to make the breath silent is to breathe from your diaphragm rather than from your shoulders. You can find tutorials by just searching how a singer breathes and that should work just fine.

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    Self Esteem Audio Series

    Script:

    If you have a self-esteem problem, you're not alone. Everyone has some difficulties associated with a lack of self-esteem-feelings of inadequacy, insecurity, depression and behavior that reflect their lack of self-confidence. This audio series will help you gain your confidence, and help you boost the quality of your life.

    32 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Carr's recording

    Just so happens this is the script for this week's contest. I submitted the entry, but I'm hearing an awful hiss! I definitely need help with my home studio setup! Any audio engineer will be fine with me.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-180/script-recording-23502.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Scott - nice read. I did notice a strong "breath" between each sentence that would have to be edited out, as it is distracting. The only other thing I noticed was some "mouth sound" throughout, as if the mike was too close.

    Keep up the good work!

    Mike

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Scott. I have also submitted a recording for this week's contest....and understand that the breaths are to be kept in....as well as other natural sounds. I did not hear a hiss on my laptop. I have however had that problem in the past. I use Audacity and have discovered the "Noise Removal" effect which seems to work pretty well. Good luck this week.....I'll be listening for you!
    MA Jacobs

    Peer Feedback:

    The hiss is only audible on my headphones. Like Marianna said, the noise removal tool works great for this kind of stuff. i just have a laptop on my dsk so i use it all the time. The way i understood it, the breaths were supposed to be there and they actually suggested dusting off an old crappy mic for this one to sound more conversational. Well Done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read Scott. I thought it was believable. Good luck in the contest!

    Peer Feedback:

    Scott, taking this week's directions into account, it seems to me that you hit it right on. Good job!

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys for your comments. Much appreciated! I'll listen for your material as well.

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    Self Esteem

    Script:

    If you have a self-esteem problem, you’re not alone. Everyone has some difficulties associated with a lack of self-esteem—feelings of inadequacy, insecurity, depression and behavior that reflect their lack of self-confidence. This audio series will help you gain your confidence, and help you boost the quality of your life.

    We begin with you. Focusing on yourself is a wonderful way to relax, clear your mind, and see yourself as others see you. You see, we are all inhibited by the way we “think” other people see us. Ironically, this mistaken impression creates most of our life-obstacles. Therefore by learning how others see us, we have a chance to see our real self – a self that is probably more ambitious and confident than we had believed.

    From the time we are young, most of us, for one reason or another, begin creating false impressions of ourselves. Eventually, we believe those made-up stories and unintentionally exaggerate them each time we repeat the story to ourselves. Eventually, we no longer know who we really are and only believe our own lies. It is this mentally exhaustive and negative cycle that mentally gets us “down.”

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MHeyden's recording

    I took the liberty of making some contractions in this script - I felt that it called for a bit more humanity. Any comments appreciated. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10833/script-recording-53484.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked your performance. It was very warm and supportive and I think making some things contractions really was a good choice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Marianne! I can hear how confident you are becoming, and rightly so! I think your tone is perfect for this, empathetic and encouraging and the contractions do add a certain relatability. I feel you establish a nice rapport with your listener. Be careful not to get into patterns with particular word combinations/phrases, in the first paragraph the repetition of "lack of self-" and "help you" were said with the same rhythm, and I also felt "lack of" was a bit choppy or over articulated. I also wonder if "others" should be the word that is hit rather than "us", but that is just a choice, your way is just as valid! "more ambitious and confident..." seemed more articulated than necessary, just be careful of glottal stops on vowels, most of the time it is better to elide vowels or consonants for flow and naturalness unless you are wanting to emphasise something (this is apparent in the last paragraph as well). You have a very clear voice so you don't need to focus so much on enunciation. Anyway, I thought this was a great read, any constructive criticism is nit picking (and just my opinion!). Great stuff Marianne! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sherrill and Niki - thanks so much to both of you for your comments. So much appreciated! Niki - you are so thorough!! Please never hold back - I so appreciate all of your great thoughts! I wish you were in the Chicago area - I would love to take one of your classes! I am really trying hard to get this VO stuff down. Best to both of you. Marianne

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    Skyview

    Script:

    Skyview is exactly what its name suggests. A birds-eye view of your professional growth and achievements. It’s a personal, accessible way for you to truly get the big picture, and own your career.

    Here’s how it works. You log in with your student information from any computer or mobile device. Then you are taken to your profile. Here’s where the true Skyview begins. At one glance you can see everything you need to know. From what you have accomplished already, to what you will be achieving next. From how many hours you have attended, to how many you have left to go. Your goals, your benchmarks, and even your financial aid.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear surfingdaisy's recording

    This was an audition and thought I'd use it to get some feed back as well. I'd like to hear your thoughts on everything. Sound, recording, and me of course! :-)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8010/script-recording-65284.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Daisy,
    Not a techie but there appears to be a bit of room noise evident in the recording. In terms of your read, it sounds like you are reading; envision actually talking to someone, imparting information and inviting them to listen to what you have to say. Also, try not to allow your voice to drop at the end of sentences, it lower the energy. Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello, you sound professional to me. A few pops here and there and a couple of sounds/letters dropped at the end of words but overall it was a good read. I liked your choices in giving the copy life, making it personable but maybe a little more life or energy.

    Peer Feedback:

    A brief critique: I'm being read to instead of being spoken to in the first person.

    THAT is the goal of delivering a script conversationally and something you'll hear time and time again as the preferred end result. It's an evasive mark....some hear it more than others and some think that 'announcer-ey' is better. Welcome to the sublime of VO. "Conversational" is the goal nowadays..where "bold announcer" was the target a decade or so ago. I would recommend that you listen to a lot of reads and then imagine you doing the same read.

    My brief critique was the first line. There are a lot of recommendations to be offered, but I'm not the only set of ears on the forum and there are some really talented posters who, I hope, will join in and listen and offer advice.

    The Edge forum is an awesome place to try new things. I've plunked a few and have hit a few. Don't be shy!! Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice clear tone to your voice, good for cutting threw any background audio.
    I would say to be more personable, as if your talking to your best friend.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Tom that this is pretty read-y. Consider that this is like a non-fiction audiobook. You're channeling the viewpoint of the author--the expert, who's excited to share and teach this information. Some tips:

    In that role, you're setting up topics and then expounding upon them. But when you dip down into a lower pitch at the end of most sentences or phrases when you're not quite done with that topic, it signals to the reader that you're moving on. Kinda "I've read this sentence and now I'm done with it. Now I'm done with this sentence. Now I'm done with this sentence." It takes on a reading cadence instead of a great talk given by an interesting person who's coming up with ways to improve upon/expound upon their point.

    It can be helpful to listen to non-professionals reading, and then you'll hear it right away. Also, if you record your own casual conversations you'll hear how people don't do it when they're talking.

    More acting technique is the non-intellectualized way around this. :) But I had to learn the nitty, gritty intellectualized way of seeing it before I could understand and believe that deep in my science-y, just-give-me-some-rules-to-follow heart.

    Peer Feedback:

    From a technical standpoint I hear some room noise that you probably should address.

    Take a little more time on the first time you say "Skyview" which is the product. Give it a little emphasis just to indicate its importance. Second sentence hit "your" a little harder.

    Add a little pause between "personal" and "accessible" -- I'd respect that comma a little more, but I would have ignored the second comma between "picture" and "and".

    "Then you are taken to your profile." Again, hit "your" giving it a little more emphasis.

    There are several distracting clicks starting with "big picture" but the loudest one is between "you" and "will be achieving next."

    "how many you have left to go" is a little slurred/rushed. Be sure to be consistent with your diction.

    Last sentence hit "even" a little more, emphasizing that there are several benefits to the product.

    Have fun!

    Nate

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    So, You’re a Parent!

    Script:

    It might not seem so at 2 in the morning, but maybe you’ve already noticed: kids grow up so quickly. In the next 4 and a half minutes, we’ll show how to make every moment count.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rdoyle1978's recording

    Just trying to get my bearings here - how is the overall sound - how is my performance? I'm still fine-tuning, but looking for additional areas to work on.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-86679/script-recording-73162.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really don't know what to say! Something there does not sound natural....and all that I remember is your name at the end!! :D

    Peer Feedback:

    This is the current contest. Just FYI, it's not really kosher to post different takes of the contest in the forum to get help when others here might be entering the same.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hmmm an excellent point there Mr. TXTom! I didn't notice that since I am not popping in like used to... yeah, it doesn't feel fair, you are right!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback - I wasn't trying to break any forum mores here.. Although I'm not sure I totally understand the problem? I posted the same take from the contest in the forum, and I genuinely am looking for feedback. I posted my entry and this forum request about 2 minutes before the contest closed, so it's not like I could even change anything.

    In fact, I got here FROM the contest.. So ... What am I missing here?

    Peer Feedback:

    the thing is is that if you post this to the contest and then post the same here, right up to 11:59PM on Tuesday, you can change out your recording with a new one. So if you get some critiques and agree with them and then re-submit based on the critiques, you're getting some coaching and/or advise others in the contest aren't getting. If everyone were doing that, this forum would FLOOD with contest entries seeking an extra set of ears for advice when the contest is supposed to be based on what you can provide in your home studio or at the studio with the script.

    So...if you got here FROM the contest, that's unusual, but still, the statement stands that it's not a good practice to try and get help before the deadline from the forum.

    Peer Feedback:

    And based on listening to the post AFTER the contest deadline has passed, I'll say that I'm hearing an announcery delivery...you're reading like you're wanting to be on radio/tv/video in a typical announcer style. I'm not hearing someone speaking to a person...but to a microphone. It's lacking a person-to-person feel. Hope that helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks folks - that helps me out!

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    Stravinsky's The Rite of Spring

    Script:

    Few single pieces of music have caused such a furor as Igor Stravinsky's The Rite of Spring, and many of the same stories are reported in various sources about the work's premiere in 1913. Saint-Saëns rose from his seat early in the performance, made a sarcastic remark, and left the theater in anger. One critic yelled out that the music was a fraud. The Austrian ambassador laughed aloud. One man, hissing, was slapped in the face by an irate female neighbor. A society woman spat in the face of one of the demonstrators. While Saint-Saëns was stalking out, fellow Frenchman Ravel was shouting "genius" and Impressionist Claude Debussy was pleading for silence.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear eliehershfield's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/stravinsky's the rite of spring 2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Quality seems find for me, re: performance, the music seems a bit foreboding for a copy that seems more anecdotal or amusing. Maybe strike a tone that is more curious or "listen to what happened when..."

    Peer Feedback:

    great voice.
    the pace is waaay-toooo-slow. speed it up, and give it a smile, and you'll nail this read.
    I agree with Addiction that this is actually a humorous read....
    good job on the French name, btw.

    cheers!
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Addiction2Diction obviously doesn't know that the music is actually the "The Rite of Spring".

    I know where you wanted to go with "furor", but the emphasis seemed a little forced. The first sentence is just a set-up for the body of the copy. We see from the actions of the various composers and audience members how contentious the piece's debut was. I do not suggest to toss off the first sentence, but the pace is too slow.

    I do agree with the above comments that this copy deserves a bit more "fun" in describing the different reactions to the piece. Because it is considered to be one of the most significant orchestral suites of the early 20th Century.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tamara.b.lilly's recording

    Per Kendra - sending Randye sample of current work on reading of narration scripts for "check up". I wanted to fit three types in, so they are tightly together and I did not concentrate on editing - so this is about the reads and not engineering or room noise. (not in studio). I appreciate any coaching notes on read of each. (will be working from notes and scheduling coaching session with RK in June.)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99340/script-recording-81118.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Tamara,

    Very good reads on all 3! You're delivery and enunciation are very smooth.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with marysboy1 that the "enunciation is very smooth". However the scripts require distinctly different delivery characteristics. These pretty much all sounded the same in attitude, dynamic range (pitch, loudness and emphasis) and energy. The middle one has slightly more smile, but only very slightly. It could have been three unrelated paragraphs of the same narrative.

    Even though you mentioned that this was not about engineering, there is a case to be made for leaving a bit more space between the three. One of the reasons that they sound somewhat similar is that it appears that you read them back to back to back without taking a break in between to shift gears, so to speak.

    Also a lot of popping.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, both. Yes - James - I can hear then need for more variation. I did record them with space in between, but cut the spaces so I could fit three in (to get more to my coach) as I needed to keep it at 60 seconds and this is just that... :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Tammy! Yay! This is nice work, and what a lovely voice you have. Fun to hear you here.

    1. That first sentence is weird, grammatically, and I would break it down a little differently. Because the second part of it is already broken up with commas, and it risks getting choppy, I would clump "America and most of the world" together as one subject, said in one tight phrase, and launch right into "entered a new phase in history". Kind of like if you said, "Tonia entered a new phase in history". Of course, that's messing with the punctuation and the writer/client might not like that, but I think it flows better. Then there's that brutal second half of the sentence: I THINK there are two parts to how the words should be clumped together...

    "What
    A. came to be called the cold war

    and

    B. dominated the second half of the twentieth century.

    You can still billboard/air quote around "cold war" and keep your pitch more mid-range so as to cue the listener that there's another part coming and you haven't closed out the thought.

    2. All Hail Whedon
    I hear the smile but you can really fun this up and get in some excitement. It's not just one series. It's not two. It's three, baby. "And his success wasn't limited to TV" sets up a punchline yet to be delivered, so don't pitch down hard and close it out as if your done.

    3. See Mad Max, yet? I'm thinking Charlize had some prosthetic pride!
    I think this one can be made a bit more conversational.

    Anyway, you sound great, but I think you're being a little overly careful and could speed up and vary your pacing and tone more. If you're working hard on clarity, et cetera, that step in the process can gum up the conversational feel until you're more comfy, and then come naturally, but those more from an acting background would tell you to pick that one person/place/vibe, put yourself there, then act.

    You can also stand if you're not already, and play around with each script in more dramatic, goofy ways and then back down into the "normal" read to help take some a touch more color into it.

    Hope this helps! I'm pretty wordy with my critiques, so just take the advice that rings true for you.

    Tonia

    Peer Feedback:

    The first and last samples had a fairly mechanical feel...almost as if a computer's voice system were reading words. The middle one had some smile and sound better in comparison, but you will definitely need to loosen up in front of the mic and back off from the enunciation a bit.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, all.
    Tonia - great input, thanks! - and I'm NOT standing yet- soon - once the studio is finished, and I think that will definitely help with the playing that you and Randye refer to. I do think I must be kind of trying too hard for the enunciation, since being loose and playful normally comes pretty naturally. I'm joining a workout group and that should also help loosen me up. I do a lot of theater, but have not done as much improv recently - so Tonia I guess we will need to get together and explore that as we've discussed. ;)
    Randye - I'll get some more work behind it and hopefully schedule another full coaching session with you in the coming month for followup. Thank you.

    Peer Feedback:

    I bet once you practice on the enunciation and get more comfortable with that, your mind will be able to put that a little bit on auto pilot and your usual M.O. will come back full swing.

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    The Northern Lights

    Script:

    Alaskan legend describes the Northern Lights as torches carried by the dead as they move into the next life. A more scientific account says that the world's oldest laser show is the result of solar particles that hurtle through space until they collide with Earth's atmosphere, releasing a burst of radiation that we see as the Northern Lights, or Aurora Borealis.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-82150.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is very smooth and the music made me feel like I should be watching the lights. Very well chosen. I heard nothing wrong with the recording quality, but was not listening on headphones.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it :) It felt like you were ready to continue on with more narration and were comfortable with the script. I thought it needed a bit more variation, but you clearly understood and seemed interested in the material.

    Peer Feedback:

    Something a little odd in your processing. The VO is really bassy (a kind of rumble) and the pauses in between don't have that warm quality. (No rumble, and possibly no room tone?)

    The narration is good.

    Watch long A's. ("Aye more scientific account..." and "aye burst of radiation") "Uh" is more (say it with me) "conversational".

    Peer Feedback:

    P.J.

    Liked your delivery, tone , and pacing! MB was a good fit too.

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    This Old House

    Script:

    This Old House
    A leaky kitchen faucet is a minor problem. Yet a steady trickle of water is a waste of both water and money, and eventually it will get on your nerves.

    Before starting repairs, your first step is to shut off both hot- and cold-water supply lines under the sink.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Todd Jones's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1234/script-recording-49950.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I Liked the read very much Todd! You are channeling Bob Villa!!!! I liked the pacing and your tone a lot!
    Jeff

    Peer Feedback:

    More like Richard Trethewey.

    I've done a lot of leaky faucet rapairs in my day, and this would not be the end of the instructions. But that's what it sonded like. Shut off the supply lines, your job is done. If there were an elipses (...) after that sentence, how differently would you interpret it?

    Instead of just reading the words, did you actually (physically) see or touch the leaky faucet? See and hear the drip, drip, drip in your mind? Picture for yourself what the first step to the repair is? Then you can communicate, accurately, what the words mean.

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    Toxins

    Script:

    Some of the most common toxins found in the human body are, arsenic, cadmium, lead and mercury. A typical cleansing of these toxins is usually done by the digestive system. But the body has more than one way of ridding itself of these toxins.

    Today we are going to look at the most often overlooked means of cleansing, sweating.
    According to research, sweat contains as many if not more toxins than blood or urine. And some toxins prefer to exit via sweat.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear psjones's recording

    Slight variation in editing, how does it sound?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-91843/script-recording-86958.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did pretty good I would take some of the bass out of your eq in your vocals. Other than that i thought it was good!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. A little bass heavy. It also makes it sound a little echo-y

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys, I suspected that, but wanted some other opinions.

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    TZ Campaign

    Script:

    Unfortunately, each year, approximately 450 families don't reach that goal. Speed, impairment and distracted driving are some of the major contributing factors to these deaths. sure police enforce traffic laws but they can't save everyone. we need a cultural revolution that refuses to accept risky driving behavior as a social norm. Obey the speed limit, drive distraction free and never drive impaired. It's our goal to have ZERO traffic death by 2030. Tell your friends, family or anyone you care about...that we can't reach zero without YOU.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Blair S's recording

    I have a new sound booth. I've also just finished radiation treatment for breast cancer. I think there's a roughness in my voice that I'm concerned about. While I would appreciate a performance review I'm also wondering if I should wait a little longer until my lungs have healed to do VO work. Thank you very much. Blair

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Blair,
    First, keep up the good fight against breast cancer. You have my respect as I know from seeing several of my family members go through this that it's not easy.

    The sound quality seemed good overall. There did seem to be some mouth noise throughout, but I'm honestly not sure how to go about reducing these (I'm new to this). The sound booth sounds great.

    Stephen

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Blair,
    I could hear your "roughness" which detracted a bit from the "flow". I liked how you chose the words to value which gave your read a nice meaningful character which seemed to match the subject well. I think if you doubt your readiness then you may want to wait. When you have the renewed confidence in your sound you'll be spot on! I liked the pace very much and could tell you connected with the subject which came through in your delivery. May I ask which sound booth you decided on?

    Peer Feedback:

    Skamar, Thank you for your feedback. I'll just try and focus on marketing for now. I'm uncertain as to how I respond to your question except through this feedback forum. I bought a used Vocal Booth through eBay. It was in pretty bad shape on the inside but was only 10 miles away. The folks at Vocal Booth (the company) were SUPER nice and attempted to help me buy a ventilation system for it. That's when I learned it was 15 years old! They sent me chord "sleeves" and foam fillers for free and made recommendations for other companies that could provide the right kind of wall foam. I'm really pleased. In the next phase of my VO career I'm going to buy one of their newer, fancier models.

    Peer Feedback:

    Blair, I think you have a lovely voice. I can't detect anything negative that might have resulted from your treatment.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Brian C. Topping's recording

    Thank you for any feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2061/script-recording-29154.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - I liked it. You followed the punctuation which made the read sound choppy. In one of the Technique Spotlight classes following the punctuation was discussed. I like your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read. Great narration voice. Very clean production quality. You're fortunate have such a quiet place to record.

    My only criticisms: I think the piece could use a little more modulation when reading through the list. Perhaps not. Director's choice, I suppose.
    Also on the inhales -- take the inhale (and even let half of it back out), wait a moment, and then do the line. That makes the breath noises easy to edit out, and the lines easy to stitch together.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, good job on this! Just to add a little thing that the above comments didn't mention, I felt that the piece felt a tad emotionless. You sounded conversational, which is good, but now you just need to add a little more flair to it; it sounds like you're uninterested in the subject matter.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Andre Hughes's recording

    Varicose veins usually occur in the superficial veins of the legs, which return approximately 15% of the blood back to the heart. One way valves in the veins help move the blood upward. When these valves fail, or the veins lose their elasticity, the blood flows backward, pools, and forms varicose veins. Approximately 80 million Americans, mostly women, have varicose veins or small, shallow spider veins. Causes are heredity, obesity, pregnancy, illness or injury. Ligation and stripping was previously considered the primary surgical procedure for treatment.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Varicose Veins final.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice, Andre. Almost a James Earl Jones timbre. A little work to get his articulation and round vowels and you might have something else to add to your resume. I like the recording quality too. Did you intend to record only half of the script?

    The read had a nice flow and made the science easily understandable. Good job.

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    Vocabulary Words

    Script:

    In this course, each vocabulary word will be pronounced, then spelled for you.

    Next, you’ll hear two or three synonyms for the vocabulary word. A synonym is a word with a similar meaning. For example, test is a synonym for exam. After the synonyms, you’ll hear an antonym for the word. An antonym is a word with an opposite meaning. For example, love is an antonym for hate. If an antonym is not given, that means the word does not have an antonym. Finally, you’ll hear the vocabulary word used in a sentence. Listen carefully for the word as it’s used in context, It may be slightly varied from it’s original usage. For example, if the vocabulary word is love, You might hear, “He loves to get gifts.” Or, “she loves chocolate cake.” The words are arranged in alphabetical order. For words with multiple meanings, the most common meaning is provided for you. In cases where two meanings are common, both meanings are given.
    Now let’s get started! Word Number 1. Abdicate. A-B-D-I-C-A-T-E. Renounce, Relinquish, Give up. An antonym for Abdicate is accept. Remember, an antonym is a word with an opposite meaning. Listen to how Abdicate is used in the following sentence. The president of the company abdicated his position because of the scandal.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Brian C. Topping's recording

    I am still new at this. I bought new equipment and trying it out. I appreciate any feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2061/script-recording-25747.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    BT, I like this read. Your voice is spot on for this instructional narration.
    For some reason, I only got the left channel in my monitor...huh.

    Peer Feedback:

    Quite nice and like mentioned, all on the left. You could mix it to mono and get rid of that problem. Good voice for this type of read and nicely executed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very easy voice to listen to! Well paced and nice clarity to your words. Straight forward read (as it should be) without sounding to impersonal. I love new gear. What did you get?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the supportive comments and feedback! TxTom, thanks for the tech help. I will see if I can repost it with the error fixed. I had just been using the computer mic which was awful I got a TLM 103 in the summer. I also got Pro Tools 9 but that is very challenging right now. This recording was done through Garage Band.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you nailed it with this one, instructional narration. it was clear, concise and created a learning environment.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agreed, except for the left side issue on this recording voice is exactly what I would expect to hear on this type of read. Well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow...pro tools is a LOT more than VO work needs....if you're going to do any music production, then it's JUST what you'd need. It's quite imposing to learn. You might have found Amadeus Pro more to your liking...and a LOT cheaper.

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    Weekend Novelist

    Script:

    Using this program, you can organize your writing around the weekends. Each weekend has a specific task – character sketch, for example, or writing deeply about your character’s past, or writing a wild, uncontrolled dream – and each task makes a building block for your novel.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear anogueira87's recording

    First-time submitter, and still feeling new at this. Unfortunately I haven't been able to take any lessons from Edge (tele or otherwise), so I'm a bit out of practice. Also, I don't have a proper mic (using my iMac's built-in mic) right now, but I tried to minimize as much BG noise as possible.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6637/script-recording-30537.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This came through in rapid bursts. Completely un-conversational in terms of what is wanted in VO.

    I won't address the sound. You mentioned the short-comings. So be it for now.

    But pace and tone are in need of addressing. You were very monotone. Not good for just about everything. Pace...VERY choppy. VERY start-and-stop.

    Listen to some of the demos of the coaches here. Listen to some of the regular contributors here who get good feedback. The approach which is preferred is 'conversational' which means you're reading the text in an "un-read" way as to make it sound as if you were speaking to someone in front of you and not to a microphone. The most common advice there is to imagine you're speaking to your best friend or significant other and NOT READING to them.

    good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with TxTom in that the read leaves a lot to be desired. I will add that giving a reason for not having at lease some type of external mic doesn't work. This is a peer review for people wanting to do Voice-Over. As such, you have to be able to cover the most basic of it by having some type of microphone to start with. I say that because I don't know that it's fair to ask for a peer review by starting off by telling the peers to overlook a significant part of the read....the sound quality, or lack thereof.

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    An inexpensive USB mic should be within your reach.

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    Yes...I agree with Tom....

    Try to get the read to be smoother......less choppy.....
    and has Henry said....these days you can get an ATK 2020 USB mike for around $100 that will make the audio much fuller.

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    Think it's all been said...read needs to be more fluid, less choppy. Maybe try to enjoy the language a bit more. Also I think you need to deaden the room some. I use old curtains in a closet and it seems to suffice.

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    Thanks everyone. I know, I really should have tried this with a USB mic instead of using the built-in, but I wanted to see how it would sound without it. Fortunately I have a mic now (a Blue Yeti) so I should be able to have better sounding recordings. As for everything else...yeah, I realize I definitely need more work on everything.

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    Writing an Essay

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    Writing an essay can seem overwhelming, but is actually easier than you think. Follow these steps to ensure essay writing success.

    Step 1: Read the writing prompt carefully. Figure out what the question is asking you to do.Are you comparing or contrasting, explaining or analyzing? Before you begin be sure you understand exactly what your assignment is.

    Step 2: Brainstorm and write all of your ideas. Think of a graphic organizer that can help you organize your thoughts. Think of the main idea of the topic and try to come up with three reasons to support your position.

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    Hey all! Would like your honest feedback on audio quality and the read itself. If volume sounds low, what do you folks do after recording to pick up the sound? I use Audacity. Do you suggest Normalize, Leveler or Amplify? And what settings are best? I did not use Noise Reduction either since I understand when sending auditions it is best to not mess around too much with the recording. Or do some of you use it at a low setting? Appreciate the feedback! Thanks.

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    BG, This is really, really well read. Tone, pace, style all good. I do have to admit the volume (I was not using headphones) was so low I didn't listen in great detail.

    Everyone it seems has the best answer to volume, but very few agree on what it is. First thing is just keep the gain up as high as you can without clipping when recording. Try to get most big peaks in the -6 to -3 level. I shoot for that but frequently in a "quiet" script fall a little short and need some amplification.

    My first coach was a firm believer in hard limiting, not normalizing, so that is what I do. I hard limit to -3 and at the same time tell it to amplify by whatever my eyeball tells me will get most peaks to between maybe -12 and -6. For me that is usually a 3 DB amplification.

    The problem with amplifying more after the session is you amplify what you don't want to make louder as well. You want the difference between your speaking and the noise floor level to be as large as possible. The way to get that is recording gain and staying maybe a little closer to the mic ( I know too close can give you some proximity effect you may not want - so find the Goldilocks spot). After recording when you amplify you are amplifying the noise as well as your voice and you end up needing to do more aggressive noise removal which is very hard to do without being obvious.

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    BG: I had the same problem--very low volume. Depending on the recording software you use, try normalizing your recording at -3db. I use Audacity and that is what mine is set at. Also, if you use a preamp, you may need to up the gain.

    Concerning the read, I found your first few lines a bit sing song. Try varying your pitch and tempo.

    Good luck and keep at it!

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    I am trying to sort out my audio as well, so can't be much help on that front. I will agree with the others that said it was a little quiet. Can you turn up your gain? or stand closer to the mic? Much beyond that and I'm still experimenting as well, so I'll let others who seem to really know audio help you out. As far as the read goes there were a few places where if felt like you needed to offer encouragement - like when you say "it's actually easier than you think." I'm still working on staying away from sounding like I'm reading, so I know it's tough but I think little vocal variety would help this read come alive.

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    Hi bgbandman,
    Two things I noticed one you read well and are conversational in your delivery. Those are two big positives. The third thing was the obvious lack of volume. Unfortunately, voice over is not a one trick pony. It requires an ever broadening set of skills. Some of which are far removed from the actual voice. Sound is a biggie. Now YOU must trouble shoot the problem and YOU must come up with the answer. There's no one waiting in the wings to help you over those obstacles. So dig out the ingenuity and fix the problem. I know you will.

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    This was a good read bgbandman. You may want to slow the pace a bit to find a balance between who the audience is. I would assume this would be for students, and based on the age the Client is looking to market to, would need to be adjusted accordingly. Younger market .... slower, university/college ... the same speed most likely. The read itself was well delivered. The tone was good and the inflections as well. Again, adjustments would be made by the director or client on the read itself as to what works and not. The sound itself was good, you may want to turn your gain up a bit, but you may be experiencing some room noise and perhaps thats the reason for keep it at that level. You seemed to hit the mic or mic stand at 6 secs (thump!) so be aware of that. That would not be acceptable to send to a client.

    Nice job overall.

    Daniel

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    Writing an Essay

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    Writing an essay can seem overwhelming, but is actually easier than you think. Follow these steps to ensure essay writing success.

    Step 1: Read the writing prompt carefully. Figure out what the question is asking you to do.Are you comparing or contrasting, explaining or analyzing? Before you begin be sure you understand exactly what your assignment is.

    Step 2: Brainstorm and write all of your ideas. Think of a graphic organizer that can help you organize your thoughts. Think of the main idea of the topic and try to come up with three reasons to support your position.

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    Hi There,

    I think that you did a Fantastic job and this sort of script is well suited for you!! Your voice is very clear, welcoming, calming and friendly!!

    I really have nothing to say, everything was spot on!! I wish you the very best in your career.

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

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    Very impressive. I'm ready to get started on my essay!

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    The age of your voice would likely seem comforting (not doting, old, or intimidating) for the student towards whom this is intended. Points for good selection of material - very important.

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    Writing an Essay

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    Writing an essay can seem overwhelming, but is actually easier than you think. Follow these steps to ensure essay writing success.

    Step 1: Read the writing prompt carefully. Figure out what the question is asking you to do.Are you comparing or contrasting, explaining or analyzing? Before you begin be sure you understand exactly what your assignment is.

    Step 2: Brainstorm and write all of your ideas. Think of a graphic organizer that can help you organize your thoughts. Think of the main idea of the topic and try to come up with three reasons to support your position.

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    Your voice has a very confident tone; very likeable.

    The "phrasing" that I hear (and this is just me) sounds as though it should be varied a little more; be less predictable. Also the endings of the sentences are de-emphasized, which I also believe, is opposite to the way it is supposed to be (from what I have read).

    But, that all said, I personally believe a voice over artist is 99% voice and 1% interpretation. You certainly have the former of the two.

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    Hi, Sabrina -

    Terrific job! You have a lovely voice and great instincts for copy. I can tell that this isn't your "first time at the dance." My one caveat would be that the technical limitations of your equipment have given your voice a rather dry, reedy sound. That, of course, has nothing to do with your considerable talent. Keep up the great work!

    Jim

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    Very nice read. I especially liked the inflection on "comparing or contrasting". I felt the instructions were clear and easily understandable. Personally I think you hit the mark.

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    2 Virtual Tour/E-Learning Scripts

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    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

    Incline Village

    Hello—you’ve arrived at Incline Village in scenic Lake Tahoe! Click “Enter” now to join our virtual tour of magnificent Village features. Click on any of the 5 tabs—Golf, Tennis, Skiing, Event & Meeting Facilities, or Local Attractions for a close-up look. Click the red Pause button or the yellow Zoom button at any time to take in even more detail. Visit Frequently Asked Questions by clicking the FAQs (“fax”) icon—it’s located at the top right of your screen. Now let’s get started!

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    A story

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    Every moment has a story. And every story matters

    The first men painted stories on stone walls, the ancient Egyptians chose the chisel instead.

    The Incans told story with dances and fire, aborigines told it with star and spear.

    Stories are at the very essence of human life. They count the breaths of every sunrise, the beats of every emotion and the silence of every heart. Stories take the fleeting temporal and makes them eternal.

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    A&E Fashion Special

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    If you're in the market to liven up your décor, here are some racy new items you can buy now to express your colorful side!

    Why not invest in functional art? Charlotte Beyorlin's geometric rugs blend swatches of velvet, suede, wool and leather to create a truly sensory delight.

    Fly away on this zany propeller stool. Aviation inspired legs support an elegant velvet cushion blending frivolity and form.

    Hand-stitched leather lamps can really lighten up a room. Mix and match the textured shades for a funky effect.Hang on to these fuzzy hangers from Domis. Unique bristles deter wrinkles and make a colorful addition to a bare closet.

    And here's another way to add some edge and comfort to your home. These authentic Tibetan lamp accessories are very hot among today's designers.

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    Abiogenic Theory

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    The abiogenic theory holds that hydrocarbons were a component of the material that formed the earth, through accretion of solids, some 4.5 billion years ago. With increasing internal heat, liquids and gases were liberated, and because they were less dense than the rocks, buoyancy forces drove them upward. In favorable conditions, the upward journey from the regions of origin would be dammed temporarily in porous rocks at depths that our drills can reach, and from which we then derive commercial petroleum.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Biological Parents

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    It is natural for an adopted child to be curious about his or her biological parents or siblings. By collecting as much background information as you can during the adoption process, you may be able to satisfactorily answer some of your child's questions. At least until he or she is old enough or able to get further information on their own.

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    Adopted Children Seeking Birth Parents

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    Adopted children are naturally curious about their birth parents and siblings. Gathering as much background information during the adoption process will prove to be helpful as your child grows. Having concrete answers to your child’s questions will provide a foundation for future conversations. This kind of honesty is essential for building a solid relationship. It also creates an environment for a grown child to confidently pursue additional information on their own.

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    Air Processor 2000

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    To install a new capsule into your air purifier, switch the unit “off.” Then remove the new capsule from it’s protective wrapping. Open the capsule cap by turning in the direction opposite to that indicated by the arrow on the cap. Insert the capsule in the cap until the tabs catch the cap. Insert the complete cap into the air purifier. Turn the cap in the direction of the arrow. And then switch the unit back “on.” Your air purifier will now release a pleasant fragrance during operation. Either choose “repeat” to watch this demonstration again, or it will automatically close.

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    Alexander Solzhenitsyn Nobel Lecture (Excerpt)

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    A work of art contains its verification in itself; artificial, strained concepts do not withstand the test of being turned into images; they fall to pieces, turn out to be sickly and pale, convince no one. Works which draw on truth and present it to us in live and concentrated form grip us, compellingly involve us, and no one ever, not even ages hence, will come forth to refute them.

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    AllState Insurance

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    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Home Owners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you’ll be covered, and that’s a good feeling. However there are some things that can’t be replaced, so that’s why it’s so important to prevent the damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you’ll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Alltel's 401k Plan

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    If the concept of long-term investing is new to you, you'll profit from learning a few basics of investing. Watching this video is a start. We'll provide you with a general background on investing and specific information on the funds available in the ALLTEL 401K plan. We can't advise you which investment selections are best for you, but hope to provide information that will allow you to make sound decisions for yourself. We'll start by taking a look at how money in the 401K plan might grow over the course of 25 years, considering various levels of contributions.

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    American Airlines

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    Welcome aboard American Airlines coast-to-coast service. We’ll be happy to do everything possible to make your flight with us a most pleasurable experience. We’ll provide you with all the information you need to know about your flight, your destination, and the equipment on which you are currently flying. In addition, we are proud to present our American Airlines feature film presentation, for our transcontinental passengers. We’d like you now to remove the plastic insert found directly in front of you in the seat back pocket. Please review the safety information during the flight for your own protection, in the unlikely event of an in-flight emergency.

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    American Life Investment -personal Finance

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    Even if you’re in the second half of your life, there is no time like the present to take stock of your financial situation. And how you deal with those personal finances will determine a lot about the quality of your life. That’s why “American Life Investment” brings you this, “My Retirement Planning” video.

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    Amica Life Insurance

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    In the next fifteen minutes, you will learn the four steps towards a better retirement. An IRA will be a key player in almost any retirement plan. Here are some steps you can take now to make your IRA work harder for you and help secure a more comfortable retirement. The earlier you start contributing to a tax-deferred annuity, the larger your nest egg can grow. Over time, the combination of tax deferral and compound interest can be dramatic. Although you can open an IRA annuity with as little as 50.00, make the maximum contribution.

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    Anatomy for ICD - 10-CM

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    Welcome to Anatomy & Pathophysiology for ICD-10-CM. Before you begin this webinar you should familiarize yourself with the terminology found @ the beginning in your downloadable handout. An increase in the normal number of leukocytes is called leukocytosis, while a decrease in the normal number is called leukopenia. There are 5 different & diverse types of leukocytes that exist, but they are all produced & derived from the hemapoitetic stem cell in the bone marrow.

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    Dear Steve: I have a small home studio with a MXL Studio 1 USB mic., M30 headphones, & set of 320USB speakers. My recording software is Sound Forge Studio 9. I have always wondered about what the client hears on the other end. Then, unfortunately, my mic. accidently slipped & hit a hard floor. Then I really was concerned about what it must sound like. The MP3 sample I am sending you has the following. I did "normalize" the script but not the slate portion at the end. I generally boost my base by 6dB's but did not on this demo. I was trying to send different portions for you to evaluate. If you need for me to send the same demo with other technical changes, be happy to do that. This evaluation is important to me. With Sincere Thanks, Rosie Goodman R4voice@gmail.com

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    The quality of the recording came thru really well. I like your voice tone. The copy that you read is very difficult. It contained words and phrasing that would be difficult for me to do. My only suggestion would be to try and read the copy with more of your personality but not taking too much away from the general copy. I find the task to be difficult. You want the listener to stay connected but you don't want them to be distracted from you are trying to say. Bottomline, great tone, quality of recording but try to put more of your personality in the read. I like the fact that you said something off the record, near the end of your recording.

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    Apex

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    This “how to” video is designed to teach you how to draw a basic area using Apex.
    In future videos, we will show you how to use the more advanced features of Apex that will help you get around those special or odd circumstances. For now, lets stick to the basics.

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    Availability

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    Availability
    Availability of business applications is required for a company to stay competitive, productive, and profitable. Application users require availability or else the business suffers. Service providers must establish an infrastructure to support the availability requirements, or they may be subject to fines and penalties. Unavailability is visible to the organization, to the organization's customers, and to the media. Attaining the desired availability does not happen by just installing lots of hardware or software. It must be planned, designed, and implemented using specific techniques.

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    Availability

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    Availability of business applications is required for a company to stay competitive, productive, and profitable. Application users require availability or else the business suffers. Service providers must establish an infrastructure to support the availability requirements, or they may be subject to fines and penalties. Unavailability is visible to the organization, to the organization's customers, and to the media. Attaining the desired availability does not happen by just installing lots of hardware or software. It must be planned, designed, and implemented using specific techniques.

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    Baby Massage

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    This video is for parents…and grandparents…and for you, because you want your baby to thrive. For a baby, touch is talk. Touch is the most developed sense a small baby has. Skin to skin contact is a powerful way to communicate with your baby before your baby can talk to you. Give your baby the gift of feeling deeply connected to you. Make sure your child knows what positive touch is all about. Create a deep and lasting bond. Years later, when your grown child gives you a big hug or confides in you, you will be glad that you gave them a special way of communicating with you.

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    Bacteria

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    The bacteria are assigned to the kingdom Monera, also called Prokaryotae. On average, the prokaryotic cells of bacteria are much smaller, and much simpler in structure, than eukaryotic cells. Most prokaryotes are one-celled, although many kinds occur as filaments (strings) or clumps of independent cells.
    Some bacterial fossils date from 3.5 billion years ago, long before the evolution of cells recognizable as eukaryotes of the modern type. Today, bacteria are still by far the most numerous organisms, flourishing in almost every conceivable habitat, including our own bodies.

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    Ballroom Dancing

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    Just as you can’t run without first learning how to walk, you can’t dance without first learning how to connect with your partner. So let’s try one of the simplest of moves… the FoxTrot. Now, grab your partner. Ladies, bring your feet together. Men, flatten your stomach.

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    Bank Employee Training Web Video

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    When you first open a Client Interaction, you will be on the Identification Page. This is the default page for all client interactions. Please confirm the caller's Social Security Number before continuing. Once confirmed, click the "next" button, like this. Great, now let's move on to step-2.

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    Basketball Video

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    Nothing is more frustrating for a basketball player than to come into a season in top shape, only to find himself sitting on the bench. That's what this Fastbreak Basketball video is for. In the next hour, you'll learn how the "Flexible Fastbreak System" can transform you from a bench warmer into a player. And where else better to begin than drills. Listed for you are the five most important drills: lead-up, breakdown drills, secondary breaks drills, …….

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    Beginning Scuba

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    During open water certification, a scuba diver is taught that the most important rule in scuba diving is to breathe continuously and to avoid holding his breath underwater. But why is this rule so important?
    Scuba diving is different from snorkeling or free diving. When a snorkeler or freediver takes a breath from the surface and dives down, the air in his lungs compresses due to the pressure of the water.
    Steps to Avoid a Pulmonary Barotrauma
    A lung over-pressurization injury is known as a pulmonary barotrauma, and can occur at both microscopic and macroscopic levels if a diver holds his breath and ascends. A pulmonary barotrauma is a dangerous injury because it can force air into a divers chest cavity or blood stream.
    The Take Home Message About the Most Important Rule in Scuba Diving:
    The rule to never hold your breath when scuba diving is important both for dive safety and dive efficiency. A diver who holds his breath underwater will not decrease his air consumption or prolong his dive. He merely increases the concentration of carbon dioxide in his lungs which makes him feel starved for air.

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    Berlitz - The German Coast Guard

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    Improve your English.

    Berlitz

    Language for life.

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    Biogenetic Law

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    Commonly summarized as “ontogeny recapitulates phylogeny” (on-TA-jeh-nee re-cah-PIT-you-lates fill-AH-jeh-nee), biogenetic law posits that the embryonic stages in the development of an individual (its ontogeny) repeat the evolutionary history of its ancestors (its phylogeny). A corollary of the biogenetic law is the idea that new evolutionary features are typically added at the end of development, with formerly adult, or “terminal” stages gradually being compressed into progressively earlier stages (or sometimes being eliminated outright).

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    Blue Angels

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    Strap yourself in for a high-altitude, history-making adventure -- you’re about to experience the thrill, precision, and aerial artistry of the Navy’s Blue Angels. This video opens the cockpit on this legendary squadron as they take off on their first European tour in 20 years. You’ll soar above Russia, where MIG fighters intercept and escort the BLUE ANGELS -- the first U.S. Military flight demo team ever to appear in the former enemy’s skies. You’ll discover the team’s illustrious story through archival footage and interviews with pilots and crews. And you’ll co-pilot an F-18 Hornet through its awesome stunts.

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    Bose 3-2-1 GS System

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    Congratulations on your discerning purchase of the new Bose 3-2-1 GS System. We’ve made this award-winning 3-2-1 DVD home entertainment system even smaller and better, with an enhanced surround sound experience from just two incredibly small speakers. With Bose patented speaker technology and our latest signal processing, your new speakers will deliver the benefits of a surround sound without running wires to the back of your room…

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    Bowflex

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    Welcome to BowFlex, the recognized leading manufacturer of exercise equipment since 1989. Everyday, millions of people use our equipment to enrich their health and lifestyle…and we’re glad you’re one of them.

    Now, to help you lose weight, shape and tone your body, improve your cardiovascular health, increase your metabolism, and to help you look and feel your best, we're pleased to introduce you to the ‘BowFlex Criss-Cross Personal Gym’ DVD.

    This interactive DVD makes everything from assembly, maintenance, and usage a snap! It allows you to tailor your workouts to match your goals. It walks you through the assembly process step-by-step! It even contains software that you can download onto your own computer to keep detailed logs of your workouts!

    Ready? Great. Choose a chapter and join millions of other happy and fit people.

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    C++ Developing an Application

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    Developing an Application

    The application you'll create (called Myapp) is a subset of the VIEWEX sample application provided with the MFC samples. Myapp lets you open new child windows, each displaying an initial message, in a Multiple Document Interface (MDI) application. When you choose Change Text from the Text menu in Myapp, a dialog box opens and allows you to change the text of the message in the currently active child window.

    Myapp starts as a default application created by AppWizard. You'll add eight lines of code to this starter application to print a message when each new document window (MDI child window) is opened. Then, you'll create a dialog box for editing the message and add a menu command for opening the dialog box.

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    Cabinet Construction

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    Whether you're building a dresser, a kitchen cabinet or bathroom vanity; basic cabinet construction is the same. A cabinet consists of a case with two sides, bottom and top, and a back and front.

    The front may contain drawers, doors or shelves; or a combination of all three. The simplest case construction is a box made of plywood. The case can be painted or stained and varnished. Solid wood can be used as a more decorative material for the small facer pieces. If a side is to be concealed against a wall, that side can be made out of a more economical plywood. However, all exposed sides should be cut from a good hardwood or smooth softwood surfaced plywood.

    You can construct a customized kitchen cabinet to fit any space or you can make them smaller units and join them in the same fashion. Shown are the typical dimensions of a kitchen cabinet base with applied facers. The upper cabinet is built in a very similar fashion. Shown is the typical construction of an upper kitchen cabinet with applied facers.

    The first step is to cut out pieces to size. Cut a one quarter inch by one quarter inch rabbet in the inside back edge of each side piece for the cabinet back. Then, assemble the basic box with glue and screws or nails. Cut the side facers and apply glue to the case edge. Align the facer flush with the case edge and then fasten in place with finishing nails. Set the nail head slightly below the wood surface with a punch. Then, measure the upper facer to fit precisely between the two side facers.

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    Calculus

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    The processes which Calculus illuminates are distributed over an enormous range in the physical sciences, from the motions of the stars to the behavior of nuclear particles; in biological sciences, from basic growth to communication problems; and in the social sciences, from population studies to the theoretical basis for scientific decision making. Calculus can be applied to any problems involving extreme amounts, such as the most, the fastest, the least, or the slowest, which may be described as values for which a certain rate of change is zero.

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    Caulking Material

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    For caulking material to be effective, it must bead across the gap between the materials and remain flexible as the changing temperature causes the materials to move. Improper or inadequate caulking can cause several problems. For one, there’s poor control of heat. That is, heat infiltrates in the summer and escapes in the winter, causing higher utility bills. Uncomfortable drafts may occur. Water may seep into the house and cause paint failure, mildew, and rotting. And in severe cases, even structural damage can be caused. In addition, exposed cracks make an attractive nesting area for insects.

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    Central Limit Theorem

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    If samples of a population with size n are drawn, and the values of x-bar are calculated for each sample group, and the distribution of x-bar is found, the distribution’s shape is found to approach a normal distribution for sufficiently large n. This theorem allows one to use the assumption of a normal distribution when dealing with x-bar. “Sufficiently large” depends on the population’s distribution and what range of x-bar is being considered; for practical purposes, the easiest approach may be to take a number
    of samples of a desired size and see if their means are normally distributed. If not, the sample size should be increased.

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    Running Shoes

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    Running Shoes