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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Retail

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    Macy's Thanksgiving Sale

    Script:

    Script:

    It’s Macy’s Thanksgiving sale. Storewide savings for the whole family. All women’s coats and jackets...30-50 percent off. All men’s outerwear...25-50 percent off. And all kids’ jackets, hats, and gloves...up to 60 percent off. Macy’s Thanksgiving Sale. All you need for the holidays.

    130 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear iboersma's recording

    Hi - I really need some professional input on my recording quality. I use a Shure SM7b mic which is fed to my Firebox then through a PreSonus Bluetube amplifier into my MacBook Pro Intel7 laptop. I use Reaper as my digital audio workstation for mastering. Two specific questions: 1) I'm not sure what my dB level should be when recording vs. what gain should be made up via mastering. It seems my volume levels when recording are pretty low and I have to jack up the gain on the Firebox and/or Bluetube amp to get decent levels. Also - what final dB level should I be shooting for when mastering? 3dB, 5db? Is your advice to make up gain in mastering via compression, normalization or both? 3) As I do have to jack up the gain while recording on my Firebox and amp, I get the typical ambient "hiss" in the raw VO that I remove during mastering (by using Reaper's "reafir" FFT plug-in), which allows me to take a sample of the hiss and then remove that set of frequencies from the audio. Is the end result acceptable? It sounds pretty good to me, but would like your professional opinion. Any pointers you have to share with me about my setup or how I am doing things would be great. Thanks, Ian Boersma

    /sites/default/files/Macys Audition- Ian Boersma 11-27-2010.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds pretty decent to me...would have liked to hear some kind of music bed to see how your delivery works with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you sounded great

    Peer Feedback:

    Interpretation was good , sounded very "commercially" i thought your inflections were spot on and you put the emphasis on all the right words if this were a job and I were the client I may have hired you . only glitch I noticed was on "25 - 30" percent off on mens outerwear you kinda stumbled on your enunciation on 25 but thats okay don't think its going to really hurt you all that much in the long run I tend to do the same thing with my voice, I think it adds kind of an interesting flavor to the read. Good Job my friend.

    Peer Feedback:

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    Peer Feedback:

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    Peer Feedback:

    Visit The Dymocks Building, a historical place located in the heart of Sydney CBD. Here you will find the shopping sydney, lawyers sydney CBD, insurance brokers sydney CBD, real estate sydney CBD etc. For more information visit our website.
    https://www.thedymocksbuilding.com.au/

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    60 people have played this

    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear Tonio's recording

    Hi Jay, I'm so looking forward to working with you on my 'new and improved' commercial demo! Here's some info for you so our time together can be optimized... First off, I am a professionally trained actor/ voice talent (trained in NY and London) and have been working in the business for many, many years! I've done numerous roles on stage (am Equity) - and have experience in quite a few areas of voice over including radio (hosted my own hour long radio show for seven years on which I read -live on the air- both adult and children's literature with ALL the character voices - "Alice In Wonderland", the 1st three books of "Harry Potter", "Charlotte's Web" and mucho others!), commercials, documentary narration, and the list goes on! My commercial demo above, I believe is 'old' - but, then, perhaps, it sounds like that to me because I've heard it way too many times - however, I'm hoping that there might be one or more pieces on it that could perhaps be 'salvaged' (though I no longer have the scripts...) - If not, at least you'll get an idea of my range and then hopefully be able to recommend what I should look for/pick out (other scripts) for my next demo which I'm hoping to record with you on Monday the 31st... If you're curious, and have the time, my other demos are on my web- site - they include narration and some audio-books. Thank you (ahead of time!) for this 'e-consult'! I look forward to working with you more directly... Warmly, Toni Orans Voice Over Artist Studio - 707-962-9404 Cell - 510-323-5257 http://www.toniorans.com

    /sites/default/files/Orans,Toni-Commercial.mp3

    Professional Feedback:

    Hey Toni! Sorry it took me so long to respond, I didn't see the initial notification. I listened through your demo a few times, and yes it could be updated. I think some of that is part of the production and less to do with you. I also feel that there may be one or two "big energy" spots too many. But that has somewhat to do with how you want to market yourself. I think the "sensitive/kids cough" spot was a good tonal choice, but feels a little sad, as opposed to caring. The first spot, digital picture, could be more conversational while still being upbeat. The spot talking about watching what your mom eats...felt like the performance was aiming at something different that the music underneath. These are directional/performance issues more than not having good copy. But it would be good to have something where you're enjoying the sensuality of a dessert, or spa, or vacation. I'd like to hear you try an authoritative spot, could be political (but don't get too topical). I'm not sure if it's going to serve your goal of updating and improving your demo to only schedule a record for the 31st, and hope that all the elements will come together. Believe me, I am not trying to get you to spend more money. I am trying to make sure you're spending your money wisely. Consider at least one coaching session, or a half a session before going for the record, especially if you're trying out some new material, which I think would improve your demo a lot. Good luck! You have a great voice and creativity:)

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 19, 2011 at 12:51PM

    Peer Feedback:

    A nice demo, but are you auditioning through the forum??

    Peer Feedback:

    The spot on cold medicine seemed out of place or out of sync with your style. The pace was too slow, seeming to make you sound sedated. The others were wonderful.

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    "Poof" by leawms

    Script:

    Have you ever noticed what happens when you put in a movie?
    It's amazing.
    You just stick it in,
    Sit back,
    Hit play, and...
    Poof.
    The rest of the world just disappears.
    Gone.
    Suddenly, it's just you and your family.
    You remember them. Your family. Some of them look like you.
    At Movie Gallery, we have thousands of great movies. Including your favorite holiday movies plus the latest releases. And every one of them is guaranteed to have the same magical powers.

    Movie Gallery.
    Play on.

    71 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    Any feedback would be welcome. I think it is a bit slow (over 30 seconds), but I was concentrating on delivery. Was I interesting or was I over enthusiastic at times? My home studio isn't set up so I know the recording quality isn't perfect.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117688/script-recording-97002.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the recording quality and performance. You kind of rushed through "It's amazing.
    You just stick it in, Sit back, Hit play, and...
    Poof." and "Some of them look like you.", so I'd slow down a bit on those.

    I think you did a great job on the tag lines at the end!

    Peer Feedback:

    way too over focused on your delivery you lost me completely after the first sentence. the read was rushed and choppy at times but thats okay choppy works in certain situations just not here this read needs to flow and sound natural. focus on the who what when where and why factor and ask yourself those important questions while you scan the script. doesn't sound like your very connected to the script either like I'm not sure if your familiar with the scenario like its just not personal and it looses my attention.

    Peer Feedback:

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    1 800 Pet Meds

    Script:

    Where do you get your pets flea, tick and heart worm medications? 1-800-PET-MEDS guarantees the lowest price on all your pets medications. Order now and receive free shipping. Call 1-800-PET-MEDS

    60 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mnicholson2003's recording

    Practicing...trying to get away from announcer voice.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-154143/script-recording-105162.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    If you want to sound less like an announcer, then lower your volume first. You have a rich, warm, clear voice. Sounded great on this script to me. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm rather new to this as well and have had to "drop the announcer". I think you sound good on this read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like this spot. still a bit of an announcer sound in there, but i think that it fits the copy well in this case. a tip i use for sounding conversational is to make the whole copy as if im talking to a friend. sometimes ill even say a name of a real friend. for ex. Hey Leon....Where do you get your pets flea, tick and heart worm medications?

    either way I think it sounded good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the announcer sound to this, it works. Love your full rich voice

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks again for the feedback. I've been doing our car dealer radio ads for about 13 years now but never had any kind of formal training or help. I really would love a career in this field so I am starting to learn new technique, listen to VO talent, watch vids, podcasts etc. I had no idea just how much work I had to do to improve. There's a lot to it and I love it! I still need work on getting rid of the announcer/radio approach. That's all I have done with our ads here....and I had no idea there's other ways to deliver your message.

    Peer Feedback:

    calm down and slow down and your vocals were recorded way too hot. if you have a picture of a friend or a family member try sticking it near the mic and make like your just having a natural conversation with them.

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    1-800-PET-MEDS

    Script:

    Where do you get your pets flea, tick and heartworm medications? 1-800-PET-MEDS guarantees the lowest price on all your pets medications. Order now and receive free shipping. Call 1-800-PET-MEDS.

    48 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jhvoiceover's recording

    I'm getting ready to start auditioning, and I just need to know if I'm on the right track with the read choices I'm making, or if I need to work on something... What do I need to improve?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-127515/script-recording-95827.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    SMILE...it is the most important thing you can do to sound warm and engaging. Keep it up :-)1

    Peer Feedback:

    S's are a kind of sharp and sibilant. Not unusual in the female voice. De-essers can help, but are not foolproof. It's a matter of finding the frequency range where your S's lie and softening them with some surgical EQing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think your voice and recording quality sound very good, but you sound very serious. A little smile, and a happy-go-lucky yet informative/helpful vibe and you're there!

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice voice for this. I think "Free" should be accentuated more. Free shipping is fantastic! It makes all the difference as to whether I will buy or not. That sentence is part of the call to action.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice fits this read very well. Your tempo was a bit slow at the beginning, but picked up towards the end. I have tried this read and haven't been able to do much with it. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    after the word "you" in the beginning you lost me on flea tick and heart worm and plus maybe you moved your head away from the mic cause your volume level went way down after heart worm. I would try playing around with different words cause you lost me after that first sentence.

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    81 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear deanalynn55's recording

    I have been working on the sound quality of my recordings. I had to add sound panels in my room - Also, I've been learning how to use the software Studio One Artist 4 - Please provide any feedback on the quality of the recording! Thank you! Deana

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-143850/script-recording-103877.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It was interesting and engaging but perhaps it could have been exaggerated a bit more. The quality was clear and sharp. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    The quality sounds great to me. I love your enthusiasm. I think you kept it very happy and exciting. Keep up the good work. If I had to say anything I would just say make sure the energy is the same throughout the whole thing and do it a few times.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sound quality was very good. I could hear it nice and clearly. Regarding performance, try to vary the pitch in the performance a bit more for greater impact, but still remain cheery. Nice work overall.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sunday Sunday Sunday car racer commercial type read it sounded like I would slow it down and add a more conversational flow to it . its not an announcer script and it felt as if you were shouting at me and it really lost my attention.

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    5 Hour Energy

    Script:

    When your battery's low, grab a great-tasting five-hour Energy.
    It'll get you back to a hundred percent. Fast.
    Five-hour energy. Get back to a hundred percent.

    98 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear voicemichael's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114101/script-recording-101016.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Loved everything from the pacing, tone, and voice. If I had to stretch to find a criticism, you might have been a titch more enthusiastic, but only if I had to! Great!

    Peer Feedback:

    nice read. only criticism is you pronounce 'hundred' as hun-ert. Since 'hundred' is a key point in this ad, you should really enunciate it more clearly.

    cheers,
    DS

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    7-11 Ad with music

    Script:

    So its two in the morning and you're starving
    Nothing in the fridge and nothing in the cupboards
    you don't even have dog biscuits hanging around
    You think about cooking, but then you remember the three alarm fires you started the last time you tried using the stove
    Well check out 7/11, There's gotta be one right near Ya'
    They have everything from burgers to tacos, 24hrs a day, seven days a week
    7/11! Think of it as your own personal walk in kitchen

    58 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bdblake's recording

    I'm very new to VO work... outfitted a closet with foam and got a condenser mic. It's been something on my list to seriously pursue for a few years. Now I'm taking the plunge. I'd like feedback on the flow of my voice through the copy. Does it sound conversational enough? Is diction okay? I added music and lowered the volume so it wouldn't interfere too much. I wasn't too sure about the word "ya" in the copy, but I just read what was there from the EdgeStudio script I used. Any feedback in appreciated... give it to me straight.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-132069/script-recording-98436.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! You have a great voice, nice tone, just need to amp up the energy. It almost sounds like you're secretly recording this so you don't wake up your family.

    Peer Feedback:

    Slow it down a little bit. It sounds like you were trying to get through it as fast as you could. Other than that, pretty good.

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    7-11

    Script:

    So its two in the morning and you're starving
    Nothing in the fridge and nothing in the cupboards
    you don't even have dog biscuits hanging around
    You think about cooking, but then you remember the three alarm fires you started the last time you tried using the stove
    Well check out 7/11, There’s gotta be one right near Ya'
    They have everything from burgers to tacos, 24hrs a day, seven days a week
    7/11! Think of it as your own personal walk in kitchen

    79 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear scdawe's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-131025/script-recording-104633.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like how clear your voice is in this script and the performance was really good. Look forward to hearing more of your uploads.

    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds like a professional recording. Well done.

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    7-11

    Script:

    So it’s 2:00 in the morning...and you’re starving. Nothin’ in the fridge, and nothin’ in the cupboards. You don’t even have dog biscuits hangin’ around. You think about cooking, but then you remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove. Well, check out 7-11. There’s gotta be one right near ya’. They have everything from burgers to tacos...24 hours a day...7 days a week. 7-11. Think of it as your own personal walk-in kitchen.

    51 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Will Parker's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-605/script-recording-33076.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Will, on my computer your voice volume was really low. I thought your reading matched the tempo of the music really well. I would prefer that the music be softer, as it seemed to drown you out. I thought your first 2 sentences were spot on in terms of tone, pace, clarity, and inflection. I think, if you continued with a similar pattern, that the rest would sound clearer and more natural! Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice relaxed, easy-going sound. This tone is called for on this script. Nice use of sound effects to reinforce the slightly humorous tone as well. I agree with Ansley's comments too.

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    A&C Diamonds - Practice Recording

    Script:

    What makes a single moment...a lifetime memory?
    The answer lies in the distinctive and eclectic collections at A & C Diamonds in Savannah.
    The timeless treasures that adorn life's hallmark moments should never be purchased in haste.
    Nor should the search for a cherished gift be left to chance.

    76 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Paul Sullivan's recording

    How does it sound? How are my siblilants? Any other comments - technical or otherwise, very welcome. Thanks for listening! P.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111062/script-recording-99864.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Love your interpretation and read, very well done. I would however, turn the background music down a bit. Want to hear you more. Great job.

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    A&C Diamonds

    Script:

    What makes a gift...unforgettable? What makes a single moment...a lifetime memory? The answer lies in the distinctive and eclectic collections at A & C Diamonds in Savannah. The timeless treasures that adorn life's hallmark moments should never be purchased in haste. Nor should the search for a cherished gift be left to chance.

    87 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear pfulgencio's recording

    Hello all. First time posting here. Trying to get feedback on everything. Delivery, recording quality, etc. This script is from the script library. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-163974/script-recording-107868.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Good tone and fairly quiet recording! I would say work on enunciation and don't rush. Try varying the speed? The first sentence is more imagery that can be a little slower. don't forget to really highlight the business name (CLIENT). The "timeless treasures" and such can be expressive but a slightly faster tempo than the first sentence.

    Try again!!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you could read this a bit slower. Consider the line "Never be purchased in haste". I believe this will also help with any clarity of speech issues. Well done and thanks for posting!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, you have the perfect tone for this script... I am new to VO. But my only criticisms would be to slow down the read a little bit, also...make sure to sound off the "t" in "gifts," right now it sounds like "giff."

    Other than that, I think you sound good.

    -Sincerely,

    Kwency

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, guys!

    @BradBeadleJr - Thanks! When you say vary the speed? Do you mean make the read more dynamic?
    I'll work on those enunciations.

    @Marquiss420 - Thanks! I thought I was going slow already but it sounds like I could go slower.

    @Kwency32 - Thank you! You're the third one who mentioned slowing down my read so I'll definitely do that! And I'll also work on that word!

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    Ace

    Script:

    Let’s face it. You could shop online or wander the endless aisles of a big box store forever and never find the one thing that could make all the difference…a friendly face.
    Not that’s an image to consider. It might as well be the Ace logo.
    Because it represents authenticity, hands on experience, a genuine interest in everyone who walks in.
    Our faces say welcome, good to see you, how’s that project.
    Because at our core we believe we exist to help others and you can see it in our faces.

    86 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bburrell's recording

    First timer. My coach said I should get a bunch of feedback, so I'm looking forward to the comments. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-160704/script-recording-107221.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your tone and pacing but it felt "soft". Like you are close to the mic and using that for volume. Just my 2 cents. Thank you for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    This was a really good read. You sounded very personal and really connected with your audience. I would just say that it sounded very intimate for a hardware store commercial. Backing up off the mic and increasing your volume to match would add a bit more energy to this.

    Peer Feedback:

    I too like your friendly, down-to-earth style. I did find your breathing a bit distracting. Practice your breathing so that you take a quick, open, full breath at the start of a sentence and gradual release it as your deliver the line. I thought you were trying to grab lots of little breaths throughout and always a bit out of breath. Again, your voice has a wonderful texture and warmth. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your enthusiasm about the subject and your voice has some scratch to it which gives it a unique quality, I've heard other v.o.'s with that style, I think its marketable!
    The last line was blurred together too fast though, other wise nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Enjoy your voice, enjoyed the reading ... the breathing was a bit distracting.

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    ACE

    Script:

    Ace Brand lawn and garden supplies are made with a satisfaction guarantee. Because all the talk in the world doesn’t matter if you can’t back it up. Ace Brand.

    77 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lohson's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100296/script-recording-90193.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent! Clear and well paced, powerful sounding!
    Have a great day!
    Maria

    Peer Feedback:

    Detecting a little bit of a regionalism. For instance: You left the D off of the first "Brand" (Bran), but made a point to hit the D in "garden" (garDen). Long A on "aye satisfaction guarantee" when in normal conversation, most of us would use the shorter "uh" sound, "uh satisfaction guarantee." You somewhat clipped the D off of "world", and "doesn't" was more like "dozen".

    But the big giveaway was "madduh" for "matter". Tapping the T's almost as D's is perfectly acceptable. But the softening of the "er" to a "uh" lends a kind of New York/New Jersey (or an urban-ish) lilt to it. Wouldn't cut it, nation wide, for Middle-American Columbus, Ohio.

    Recording quality is a bit echo-y. The sound is bouncing off of reflective surfaces.

    Peer Feedback:

    Delivery was good, but the pace seems just a little rushed especially at the very beginning.

    Great voice.

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    Adidas Sl Hoops At Champs

    Script:

    The new SL Hoops from Adidas. Where sport and style become one. July 25. Only at Champs Sports. Where sport lives.

    72 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-144169/script-recording-103905.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the read and quality was good. However, I felt like you were reading and I also felt your lack of familiarity with the script.. Needs to be a bit smoother.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job!

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    Advil - borrowed from another artist

    Script:

    Arthritis pain? It’s a part of my life. So I keep Advil close by. Just ONE works as well as TWO regular Tylenol. Advil works at the site of minor arthritis pain -- stopping it where it starts. Nothing’s proven to work better or last longer than Advil. And now introducing new ADVIL GEL CAPLETS. One more advance for Advil. Advanced medicine for pain.

    69 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear vanhickman's recording

    2nd ever upload for feedback. Trying to take previous comments to heart. Do I sound relatable on the performance and does the technical quality sound ok?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-129235/script-recording-96799.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read. I like how you emphasized ONE and TWO when comparing to Tylenol. I'd recommend giving just a little more emphasis/attention to "Ad" words since they appear many times throughout the copy (Advil and Advance). Finally, I'd recommend that you emphasize "work better / last longer" since it's what the company wants to get across.

    Just my 2 cents

    -JCVO

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice pacing I agree with emphasizing one and two (that's a sell line), and recommend also hitting "nothing's". Your technical sound quality was good, I didn't notice any background or room noise. The equalizer seemed a little on the "bright" side for my ears. I makes your voice sound a bit harsh.

    With this specific script, I struggled with your pronunciation of "Advil" it sounded like your were swallowing the "vil". It came out more like a "vel" as in vellum paper, instead of "vil" as in village. I had to pull up an Advil commercial on YouTube to double check (https://www.youtube.com/user/advilbrand). When doing commercial work you want to make sure the enunciation and pronunciation of the sell words is spot-on. I think your best one was the last "Advil".

    I really like the way you clearly enunciated "TWO regular Tylenol" that's a lot of r's and l's to wrap your tongue around and you did very well there. Good job keep up the practicing!

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    Air Wick

    Script:

    Relaxes like a back massage, but costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. We could all use a little break. That’s why AirWick designed a range of aromatherapy products with a unique blend of essential oils that will revitalize your spirits. AirWick. It’s good to be home.

    100 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear PJ Corso's recording

    Getting behind the mic and starting to practice regularly! This is not the mic I'll be using for professional auditions, so sound quality is not my concern as much as performance. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-106165/script-recording-85886.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi PJ,

    Nice and friendly again. I think the pace is a little slow, and the pause between the product name and the catch phrase at the end is too long. You also come up in pitch on "break" in the second sentence. You could try smiling more when you deliver that line, and saying it in a knowing way.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read. Soothing inflections, as needed. Relaxing pace. I like your appropriate degree of emphasis on 'back massage.' Can't think of anything to offer for improvement.
    Would be good to hear on your upgraded microphone.

    Peer Feedback:

    PJ:

    I know you're not looking for technical feedback per se, but in addition to your microphone, I'd look at your performance space; it sounds pretty echo-ey to me.

    Performance wise, I'll just second shauntoole and montanajones, since I heard the same things. Nice voice!

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi. PJ. Good work. You are reading well with a nice upbeat energy. Now, for the advanced stuff! I would love to see you soften your initial consonant attack when you hit important words. When we hit using pitch lift or vowel stretch, as we do when we are talking in life and not reading, we want to glide upward or onward with connection and flow...a bit like singing....voicing in a smooth legato way. Attacking the front of the words will make your read seem more old school and less current and give you a salesy feel. It will create a staccato feeling and separation between your words. This script would also benefit from a bit of copy analysis. I feel like the beginning is Relaxes like a back massage. But costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. I would try reading this with a period after massage and playing two different acting actions for each thought. Try that relaxes like a back massage is a yummy relaxing fact. Tell yourself I am going to relax her. Then try to color the price and durability feature and benefit a bit differently. You could appeal to my love of a bargain and surprise me with the good news. Say to yourself I have an exciting secret for her. Its fantastic! On...We could all use a little break. You can befriend me here. We are alike. I would try 3 in a row on this line to explore your acting options. Then we kick into the middle of the copy where you have me. I am your friend now... we do have the same needs and you are going to tell me more about how Airwick can solve my problem right away. The tag, where you remind me what to buy, is my call to action. In your mind you might think ( you really have to get) Airwick. I would do three in a row again on the tag, to explore the acting options here as well. The subtle word coloring on Airwick and It's good to be home may be be different. Airwick. May sound solid and confident. You may be empowering me with a solution. It's good to be home may sound smart and intelligent or carefree and easy. The important thing with commercial work is to not blanket the entire read with one color. Overall, I feel this read is upbeat. I would shift the tone to a bit more relaxing and then inside the character of the man who relaxes me there must be shifts in the demands you make on the listener. I would suggest working on these ideas separately. First the hitting using pitch lift. Then copy analysis. Then playing different actions. Then your three in a rows. Then go back and put it altogether. When you put it all together. Trust that the work you did on it individually will stick and just really try to get the images rolling in your mind. The mic loves mind pictures. Really check in with the imaginary listener and see if you are engaging them. I hope these tips help. Keep up the good work! I look forward to hearing you again soon. Danielle

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach January 11, 2016 at 8:59AM
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    Airwick Airways

    Script:

    This is Nick.
    This is Nora.
    This is Nick’s nose. This is Nora’s nose.
    Nick’s nose likes a little air freshener. Nora’s nose likes a lot. Their noses don’t know what to do.
    Until their nosy neighbor Ned told them about new improved Airwick Airwaves.
    Airways have a low setting for Nick’s nose, a higher setting for Nora’s nose or an automatic setting for their nosy neighbor NED’s nose.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Hello all! After seeing such great work by the likes of, just to name a few... Richurd, Bill A, TxTom, Mary Ann Richards and Sabrinasvoice, I just pulled some copy and recorded it. Tricky diction was the theme of this, and timing. Note: original script has a typo. "...Airways have a low..." should probably be Airwaves, but that was what was written. I added the sound bed as an experiment because I so seldom do it. Used a neat trick I learned from a pal too! Since last time, I have added a Mic Preamp to the audio chain, I also made improvements to my recording space, widening the recording booth/area by about 24 inches to give a more open, more natural sound. Feel free to comment on Performance and on Technical quality. This is a little different from my normal dry industrial reads. Thanks! Nodo420

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    Peer Feedback:

    Recording Quality-
    Awesome! (It would be nice to know what your pal told you-just being nosy.)

    Performance-
    (Still in the infancy stages myself, but man, I really can't hear any problem with this to comment other than, "great read!")

    Peer Feedback:

    Phew, a relief! Happy to share the tip, I have the audio on one track the voice on another right? Well, with an eq, lower the frequencies that your voice resides. For me, I tuned out a lot of the midrange freq's and left the high and low freqs in the soundbed. I also used a low cut filter @60 hz on the voice over and warmed the mid range frequencies a little with a compressor.
    But when you remove or lower the frequencies where your voice is, it comes through so much clearer and you can better match the loudness of the soundbed with that of your voice. Or words to that effect...
    Thanks for taking the time to listen and comment!

    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds great, Ted. I like your performance and the audio mix very much. Thank you for sharing the tip as well. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted, I think this is some of your best work to date. I loved the friendly, conversational tone. And the pacing and music was terrific as well. Excellent!

    Peer Feedback:

    Agreed with all the comments above!

    Peer Feedback:

    I got nothing to critique. Sounds pro to me!
    Shane

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Shane, Daniel, Javier and Bill A,, I had just irreparably destroyed (by improving) my sound recording area and added the pre-amp. I was praying that I hadn't ruined my recording area in an effort to get a better sound. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    Have to agree with the boys great recording
    Good job overall
    regards
    balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Fantastic read, Ted!! But what is the ONE thing that burns?? Look at the time, bud!! You give it a little intro before you started and that could be tightened up, but pace is probably the bigger worry on getting that down to 30s. Loved it, though!! Perfect tone to my ears.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted,

    Really liked this! Enjoyed the delivery which was friendly with a touch of humor, perfect music bed and sound quality was excellent. Great job!

    All the best,
    Lenny.

    Peer Feedback:

    What can I say that hasn't been said? Great read...neat choice of music bed...nice production all round. Well done sir! Ian

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    AirWick

    Script:

    Relaxes like a back massage, but costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. We could all use a little break. That’s why AirWick designed a range of aromatherapy products with a unique blend of essential oils that will revitalize your spirits. AirWick. It’s good to be home.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kristan's recording

    Hello, I am at the beginning of my VO training and would like to have any feedback and tips you may have. This is my first upload and I am just using my phone at the moment. I will be taking the Home Studio 101 class in October. I have a question about saying words with the 's' sound. When I say these words I feel that it sounds too much like noise (not sure how to explain it) but how do I dim my 's' sounds to not sound so distinct? Can you hear it dramatically on this recording? Should I even worry about this?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-93438/script-recording-74689.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Did you file get uploaded? I got silence.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mmm, actually I don't know what happened it played before submitted it. But I will try and upload it again. I think I might need to convert it somehow. Thank you for letting me know. I will resubmit it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Make sure it's MP3 and not MP4 or AVI or WAV. It has to be MP3.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ah yes, thank you. I converted it to the MP3 now and resubmitted my read. It is working now, I will make sure I convert the file before I try to upload it next time.

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    Alamo Rental Car

    Script:

    If you’re ever near Durango, Colorado, you’ll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America. And every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamescooperVO's recording

    Preparing for one on one training at EDGE in a couple weeks. Any feedback prior to then is greatly appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey James!
    Nice read, I thought it was convincing. Being a new guy myself, that's something I work on, so nice job. I can hear a little echo, could be me, but probably nothing a few blankets in the right place couldn't solve. Other than that, I enjoyed it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice and warm read like always it makes me want to discover that road to the sky !
    indeed there is some echo going there but nothing that can't be dealt with.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice! I liked your warm, friendly and conversational read. Good job!

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    Albertson's

    Script:

    Albertson's

    Albertson's has everything you need, every day. The freshest food at low Albertson's prices. And right now you can save even more during our huge anniversary sale.Get selected varieties of Gatorade, 8=pack, 20 ounce bottles 3.99 each when you buy 5, plus selected varieties of Quaker Chewy Bars or Dibbs, 5 to8 count, 1.49 each when you buy 5. Mix or match. Albertson's huge anniversary sale. It's just better

    63 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shreevidz's recording

    My first time submitting here and of welcome any and all feedback! I don't have a proper mic just yet so this was done on my iphone and with no editing software used either so quality is as expected. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Shreeviz how are you ?

    It isn't fair to YOU to have me critique this performance because of exactly what you stated! I can hear a very pleasant and . modulated voice in you, so the phone recording is doing you no favors. So with that in mind, look at the simple home studio setup info on here and at many sites. I use it believe me..I am still trying to get there !
    Get that wall echo, sound buzz etc outta there and then I can be more engaged directly!\ free editing software is pretty easy to use for starters...

    bring it back strong....

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Scott!

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    Amazon

    Script:

    Selling on Amazon is far from a walk in the park
    And managing your PPC effectively makes it even harder.
    Introducing Viral Launch Kinetic - the only tool that understands and delivers what Amazon sellers need to drive campaign performance for guaranteed increase in revenue.
    More automation for more control, with easy to create, customizable rules that allow for multiple conditions to achieve your highest return on ad spend.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mahoneybill's recording

    Whatever you got.. read, recording quality, etc.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! I think your tone, clarity, audio quality are all excellent. Nice transition in tone from the problem to solution too. I do think an extra "beat" is needed after "even harder"and a bit more energy/warmth on "guaranteed increase in revenue." Small adjustments. Otherwise, very competitive. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with BillA's comments above. I'd only add that a SLIGHTLY slower read might allow for the adjustments he referenced to be more easily made.
    Good job, Keep on trunkin'!

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    American Express

    Script:

    Day and Night, we make things happen.
    We've helped celebrate forgotten anniversaries.
    Found tired travellers a bed.
    All over the world, we've gone above and beyond, 24/7..
    We personally delivered replacement cards.
    Found doctors who speak your language..
    We've tracked down lost wedding dresses..
    Turned 3 Star into a Million Star dining.
    We've even returned a loved one home.
    Impossible...Nah!
    Does this sound like the service you get from your card?
    American Express. Realise the potential.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lmsimeon27's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love the energy and casual attitude here. It actually sound like a buddy is telling me about the benefits of having an Amex card. In the first few lines, you sound a little bit rushed so the first two lines sound like one sentence with commas, rather than two separate thoughts. I like the delivery over all!

    Peer Feedback:

    I would say to try the read a little bit slower. I felt that towards the middle of the script it began to feel like you were reading instead of describing the great things this card has done. Try it a few different ways to see which one you feel the connection to. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't feel a connection the words you were delivering...it felt/sounded read. Slow it down as if you were talking to someone and telling them about this card...not reading a script into a mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    I see that this is your first submission, so I'll offer some fundamentals.

    Who are you talking to? Now-a- days, the buzz word is "conversational" and to have a conversation you need to have someone (just one someone) in your mind that you want to tell this story to. Sometimes it's helpful to create for yourself a "before and after moment" to know where you are coming from and where you're going to. It's also known as a "pre-sentence". So on something like this you might say (or think), "Hey, Jimmy, did you know that --- Day and Night, blah, blah, blah..."

    As for the read itself: You're rushing, and as you do, your words become mushed and inarticulate. Examples:

    "celebrate" - The end of the word got clipped. it sounded more like "celebray". I don't necessarily need a strong, sharp T sound, but I do need a little tapped T so that I know what the word is or not think I misheard something - which will make me miss the next two sentences.

    "found tired travelers a bed" sounded like "fountire travelers a beh"

    "All over the world" was "All over the whirl"

    "delivered" just got mangled.

    There is a certain regionalism here, maybe an urban-ness, that may be fine for some kinds of spots. But for something as mainstream and universally National and International as Amex, you need to cultivate that neutral American accent (unless you happen to be a celebrity). And that's one of the hard truths of VO.

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    American Tire Supply

    Script:

    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear comfort_not_speed's recording

    I tried backing off the mic to reduce mouth noise, but that may of resulted in too much room noise instead. What do you think? Also, any thoughts about the performance would be appreciated as well.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107237/script-recording-84695.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Clearly enunciated, but it sounded like you were "reading". Very noticeable room reverberation in the background. Hope that helps.
    All the Best,
    Mike W.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think I could hear some fan noise in the background also.
    Mike W.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it pretty good bass in the voice and I think the speed was pretty good. Recording quality was good as well I really liked to be honest

    Peer Feedback:

    First the positives- You have a really great voice with a good range of tone and your enunciation is terrific.
    I would have liked to hear your piece move a bit more smoothly, perhaps tying the thoughts togethr more tightly so they flowed.
    You handled the tag really well moving into a completely different rhythm.
    The main negative I heard is that your space seems very "live"
    with a something going on in the background.
    Overall- really good - just a few technical things to address.

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    American Tire Supply

    Script:

    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free!-Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So-hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear keith.nelson's recording

    This is the second take. The first two I uploaded were the same take. Took the direction to be a little more excited about the sales. Hope you all see improvement but either way give me the hard truth. Thank you all.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-69455/script-recording-98722.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The record sounded fine...suggestion: read the script a few more times to get really familiar with it, then imagine you are telling a buddy about the amazing FREE offer...

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Ian, I agree wish could delete this one. I'm going to try a third take.

    Peer Feedback:

    Keith -
    I like the higher pitch guy-next-door delivery. Kinda like Charlie Day. He would be a good reference for this read style. I think you should include a little more high->low and low->high inflection so it isn't just one note all the way through.

    If I were the director, I'd do a couple more takes and play with the emphasized words in each phrase. For example, in the first line "Now when's the last time ya' heard that?"
    you might try hitting "that" at the end instead of "when"...

    nice read,
    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Dave, great input. I often wonder about my high pitch thank you for the Charlie Day reference. I'm still struggling with going high and low without making it sound pushed, practice, practice, practice. Thanks again.

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    American Tire Supply

    Script:

    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

    62 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lohson's recording

    Thank you for the feedback. I really do appreciate it. One thing, please no recording quality feedback because I'm recording on my phone. I do not have a home recording studio but I'm working on it. Lol!

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    Peer Feedback:

    There are certain words that copy writers use and advertisers like to couple with their products/services. NEW. IMPROVED. NEW & IMPROVED, ALL NEW, INTRODUCING, etc. FREE is also one of those. So, even if it feels odd to do so, it needs special emphasis, even in a "conversational" context. Didn't get the feeling that the first word really meant anything to you - it sounded a little "down". Here's a place where you might have imagined an exclamation point rather than just a period.

    Sometimes "Hey" is a call to someone or a question as a stand-alone word. But I would submit that here, it's in there just to indicate a more colloquial, "conversational" tone. The sentence makes sense without it, so it's not really that important of a word. So, IMHO, it's more like a guttural interjection than a complete word. Ignore the comma and elide it into the beginning of the sentence.

    This is a good piece of copy to use the "shoulder shrug" technique - on more than one line. It will warm up the delivery, like you're talking to the guy next door over the fence between your yards.

    Big plosive pop on "while" and some minor ones. Also some mouth noise.

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    Animal Health

    Script:

    He makes you laugh. Actually likes snuggling. And never channel surfs. Doesn't he deserve a little extra attention from you? Each year, dogs of all ages, breeds, and sizes develop arthritis. If you notice a loss of mobility or energy level after normal activity, find out how Rimadyl has helped nearly one million dogs with arthritis put quality of life ahead of their pain.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear actingmaven's recording

    Trying out my editing skills and a new genre. Love to hear your thoughts.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a really nice voice. But, be careful you added a whole line that wasnt in the original script. It still made sense but I've been told several times to not add or delete so you may just want to be careful.

    Your voice is soothing. and has a lot of heart.

    Peer Feedback:

    Oops! Just forgot to type it in. That line actually is in the original script. Good ear! And thanks for listening.

    Peer Feedback:

    First, I'm new. So just browsing through to hear a few scripts read aloud. Sounds pretty smooth to me. I don't hear any problems and voice conveys the message well :)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Animal Health.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, here's my opinion: I like your nice friendly voice but think the pace is too slow. It almost sounds like you're reading to a small child. Try to be more natural or conversational.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,
    Nice work. I actually think the slower pacing is nice for the first chunk of it-- it might be good to pick up the pace starting at "if you notice". It sounded a bit like you were gasping for breath at the end of the read. Otherwise, I liked it.
    Cheers,
    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Peter. I'll listen again. I didn't notice the gasping either while I was doing the recording or listening back but it was probably there. Sometimes I run out of breath quickly if I'm a little nervous.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    I'm working on speeding up the pace a little, although with this script it feels like it should be slow and sensual. It was a bit of a struggle to get as close to twenty seconds as I did. It sounded like it should be a twenty-second spot and I did it in twenty-one.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Aqua-Spa.MP3

    Peer Feedback:

    your voice is good. the read/pacing is way way to fast. there were no pauses. also there was no changes in the inflection of your voice, no change in emotion. you also need to record in a better enviroment as yours was live & boxy sounding. may also need to invest in some better recording equipment. this will improve some of the problems. keep practicing you will get better

    Peer Feedback:

    You're rolling your vowels through pitch still some, Chris, but I can definitely hear improvement! I thought the pace was right.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice for this type of read. I agree though with Dewayne, it sounded as if you were reading, talking at me instead of to me

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for all comments on this recording. Rick, I know that I was a little impatient with myself when I did the last take and it came through. Doing this particular read has taught me that letting my impatience color the read does make it sound as though I'm talking at the listener. Good call.

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    ArWick

    Script:

    Relaxes like a back massage, but costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. We could all use a little break. That’s why AirWick designed a range of aromatherapy products with a unique blend of essential oils that will revitalize your spirits. AirWick. It’s good to be home.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kristan's recording

    Hopefully this one works. Hello, I am at the beginning of my VO training and would like to have any feedback and tips you may have. This is my first upload and I am just using my phone at the moment. I have a question about saying words with the 's' sound. When I say these words I feel that it sounds too much like noise but how do I dim my 's' sounds to not sound so distinct? Can you hear it dramatically on this recording? Should I even worry about this?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-93438/script-recording-74697.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good.
    You emphasized on the E in "essential" and"revitalize"sounded very English.
    Not sure if you wanted to do this or not but it stood out to me.
    Great job of using your phone for recording!

    Peer Feedback:

    I am fairly new also. I would think about stretching out "relaxes" and maybe even physically stretch as you do so. I didn't notice any S problems. good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Dan and Tom. No Dan, I was not trying to use an accent so thanks for catching that. I have been working on trying to neutralize my pronunciations but every now and then certain words and vowel sounds are difficult to manage. I will keep working on it. And Tom that is a good idea, I was rather confined in the space I used while recording, I'll try using my body as you suggested on this next go. Thank you both again

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    Because I use a text-to-speech screen reader with a synthesized voice I find it very easy to fall into the trap of making my reads somewhat choppy. On this read when I tried to smooth things out I ended up becoming a little breathless on the word "Panasonic". It caught me by surprise and concerned me a little because most of the sentences were very comfortable for me when I was finding places to breathe.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm going to paraphrase something a coach told me today: ready your mind and set your tone before uttering the first word. In the case of this copy, "Listen" almost seems like it should be whispered--as though a gentle command spoken to a child. I certainly could be way off base in my interpretation, but that first word seems to set the tone for what follows.

    I, too, am focussing on my breath control and experimenting to determine the best places to pause for breath. I love this copy and will take my stab at it tomorrow.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,
    Overall not a bad read. I liked it, but the "Panasonic" would have put it in the dust bin for me. The sound quality I assume is due to the equipment you have available to you. The problem with that is that the script is all about sound quality. You might want to save scripts like this for when you are able to upgrade your system. Putting that aside, your delivery was very natural and pleasant to listen to. You were loose enough to inflect naturally and come across with an unaffected delivery. Worthy of a redo.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for both comments. Jim, I was a little bit afraid that my gentle whisper wouldn't be heard very well. Richard, you make a good point. It may be a while before I can upgrade my recording equipment and sound environment but when I do I'll rerecord this script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris --
    you sound very relaxed and comfortable in this read, and I noticed that you smoothed out the pace as well. nice job.

    A good teachable moment here: the Brand name isn't just a word in the sentence, it's the showcase word. in the first Panasonic you sounded a little too loose, and the 2nd one you aired out. Those things happen, but do the 2nd take and fix it in editing.

    good practice piece.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

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    Audio Associates

    Script:

    Listen... What do you hear? Nothing. No noise ... digital audio purity. The new digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic will change the way you listen to music. Now listen… What do you hear? Every nuance … crystal clear … like it was meant to sound. So sit down, relax, close your eyes, and get ready for the digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic. Only at AUDIO ASSOCIATES... there’s no mistaking our sound.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This is a repeat from about a week ago. There are 2 takes. For the first one, my goal was to get it down to a :30 spot. The second one was an acting exercise. I wanted to pretend that the client gave me his/her interpretation of which words they wanted punched and see if I could make sense of it. Elements of it probably sound unnatural, but that was the point. Which one makes more sense? The one that the client wants.

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    Peer Feedback:

    James, I liked the first one more. The second had a condescending tone. And while you have a natural conversational tone, you also have a tendency to not allow enough space between sentences, such as after "Listen", which makes the recording sound a little bunched up. Pretty darn good otherwise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Unfortunately, a lot of those spaces had to be edited to give me just those fractions I needed to bring the first one in under :30 without the meat of the sentences being rushed. Just a judgement call. I'm a singer, so I can put a very long phrase or many sentences together in one breath. But that also makes it sound unnatural and tiresome (anxious), I suppose. I actually edited breaths into the first one. Betcha can't fine 'em (well, maybe one).

    The second one was hopeless to come in under :30, so I got as close as I could. I also did it much more quickly (last night in only about 4 takes) and finished the music this morning. Just an acting exercise.

    My next trick is to limit myself fo 1 hour for any particular commercial recording script. I suffered from the "just one more take" syndrome with the first one. Can't even begin to tell you how many I did because I didn't keep them all. Woudn't have that luxury in a real world situatiuon away from my home studio.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,

    First and foremost let me say, that you have a wonderful voice! I haven't posted anything for awhile as I'm so busy with other projects (not VO related) that I'm focusing on. However, I enjoyed the first version of the read, as IMO it appeared more natural and conversational and was delivered perfectly. Also I've read some of your comments on other's post and your critiques are quite helpful. If and when I do post, and you happen to listen, I would appreciate any of your feedback. Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James, I enjoyed the first as well. I also follow your critiques which are well rounded and valid. Your a valued member of this forum. If you don't mind, I'd like to try this script and work within the 30 secs as well. I would enjoy that challenge ( I think! ), it seems very difficult to do well, after just reading it dry a couple of times, with my stop watch.

    Peer Feedback:

    I just picked up a book, "The Art of Voice Acting", and started reading it today. One line struck me as funnily poinient. "You will be faced with cramming :40 of copy into :30-- and the producer will expect it to sound natural and believable." That's this piece of copy in a nutshell. Try it, Daniel. It's a real challenge. Couldn't have had my own limited success without the gauntlet being thrown down at my previous read by Mike Forbes.

    About my critiques. One positive comment on them would constitute just an opinion. Two positives may be coincidence. But more than that is a trend, I guess. And I thank you all for giving my critiques weight and validation. I must confess that, in the beginning, I did not feel qualified in any way to make any kind of judgment, and sometimes I do so with a bit of trepidation as not to wound anybody's sensibilities or egos. But I was forced to do so by the rules of the forum in order that I might post my reads. It also helps me find direction for myself to understand the positives and pitfalls of acting with a voice alone.

    Peer Feedback:

    A book you might want to seek out is "Word of Mouth" by Susan Blu and a couple of other contributors (depending on the edition) as it comes with a CD that has samples of what the book refers too. And it's cheap. Good resource.

    Peer Feedback:

    I will look into that. Thanks TxTom.

    Peer Feedback:

    Well done! I like the first version best. I noticed a couple a big breaths in there, but other than that your voice is very easy to listen to. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read, and Thank u for book info.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jamesromick -

    to be honest, this wasn't your best work. Especially in light of some of your really good stuff ("Best Buy" and some others comes to mind).
    ironically, I could hear background hiss, room noise, and big breaths in this read at the beginning when all was supposedly quiet.
    (I'm really surprised that TxTom didn't take the bait on that one ;-)

    "If I were the director...."
    The first read was better, but I would've liked a longer pause on the first "Listen...." you're giving the listener a chance to listen to the pure audio nothingness....that's not the right place to rush and save a second or 2.
    And the Eurythmics didn't really demonstrate Panasonic awesomeness either....
    Whenever there were ellipses for the listener to take a listen, you rolled right over them. "Honor the ellipses!"

    This read didn't really do a whole lot for me -- not being a jerk, but this one wasn't there.

    Apologies for being brusque, but hopefully not too off-putting. Maybe I'm critiquing the wrong things.
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    DS-

    Not to worry. I have a pretty thick skin. My whole purpose here is to get better, sound like a professional and go on to make big bucks. I'm in a big market and have to push myself to compete. So (almost) any critisism is welcome. I think I'm a pretty good judge of what things I can use and what to discount. I don't expect, and wouldn't want, this forum just to be a mutual admiration society. That's not useful.

    BTW - I just like the Eurythmics. We all have blind our blind spots, I guess.

    Peer Feedback:

    cool. well taken, in the spirit it was given.
    Give us more!
    DS.

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    Audio Associates

    Script:

    Listen... What do you hear? Nothing. No noise ... digital audio purity. The new digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic will change the way you listen to music. Now listen… What do you hear? Every nuance … crystal clear … like it was meant to sound. So sit down, relax, close your eyes, and get ready for the digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic. Only at AUDIO ASSOCIATES... there’s no mistaking our sound.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I couldn't get this in under :30 without it feeling rushed. Even by trimming the gaps in the first part. So, after several attempts, I left it alone. I also just put together a booth in one of my closets. It's not totally complete, but I hope it cut down on excess back ground noise.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-47720.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds really good from a recording stand point. Your sound is clean and present and up front. The music bed comes in a bit strong then tapers down, which is ok, but when demoing headphones as an example, I may turn it down only to turn it back up again, so I would correct that (personally). You rushed through "sit down, relax, close your eyes". I would take that part a little slower similar to the way you delivered the rest of the script. I would also put a short pause just before Audio Associates to make the customer more pronounced with a bit more impact.

    Peer Feedback:

    James. Beautiful voice and tone quality. Sounds like you ran a little out of breath somewhere from "....close your eyes......Panasonic, "Enhanced" didn't come out right and there wasn't much emphasis on "Panasonic".

    Your voice sounds familiar, Did you voice the "Transom Mike Shootout test". And, you are not by any chance, the James Romick, are you? Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Noise gate or sound being slammed down in the section where you're not using a music bed is a bit distracting. I would suggest backing away from the mic a little so your presence isn't quite so strong.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks to all.

    Brian - I wanted the audience to hear "nothing" in those first pauses. Unfortunatly, as I have gotten older, I'm loosing the higher frequencies from my hearing. Sometimes I can't even hear my cell phone ring. That's why I have it on vibrate also. So I might have missed such a drastic change.

    Daniel - Same for the music. I like my rock-n-roll really loud, but I tried not to have it overpower the voice - and come in at :30. Maybe that's why some of it seemed rushed. I would think that a pro audio engineer would take care of blending in the music properly.

    Arlen - What? Did you Google Me? And do I know you?

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, James...

    I absolutely believe you can get this in at :30, and still retain the feel of the piece. I also feel you could kick up the energy a few notches and still be faithful to the message. Try less space between words. Pick up the pace just a bit...nothing crazy, but just a bit. It's all about your attitude in the read, not necessarily the speed. (Oo...that rhymed).
    I know you can turn this into something good.

    Happy New Year...

    Mike F.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mike-

    Gonna try again.
    Get it under :30.
    Maybe different music?
    Somethin' down 'n' dirty.

    Hey, that rhymed too.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Chris Coulter's recording

    The controls on my recorder are inconveniently close to the mic and I know that in the last second or so of the recording you'll be able to hear me brush the mic. That's one of the first things I'll learn to deal with when I have editing software. Any suggestions that'll help until then?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Regarding editing software, Audacity is free and it's not bad.

    Peer Feedback:

    I felt a big bogged down with the slow read but I liked the energy in the last sentence. How about doing the whole thing with that energy. You have a sultry voice that could be good with a different kind of script. I use audacity, too. Worth a try.

    Peer Feedback:

    I am seriously considering Audacity. I know there is a version for Mac but mine is a Mac OS10 running Leopard and I've been burned when I've downloaded software for newer versions. Would the most recent version of Audacity work on a Mac that was bought in about 2004 and upgraded from the Tiger operating system to Leopard?

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this! The slowness felt intentional, and it went with the fun attitude. I'd still bump it faster, but I could imagine it with the right images and music, and I thought the last line was really fun!

    Today's Saturday class was with Scott Burns: Characters beyond Cartoon. He always does a FABULOUS job coaching people in these classes. Takes tons of time. Leads them through different exercises. Definitely super helpful for not just character things but also straighter narration reads, too. And the man is a Character with a capital C. Very fun. Just thought I'd put him on your radar for when you get ready to sign up for coaching.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chris,

    I also have a Mac and I use my Garageband and Wavepad for my recordings. I have used Garageband for over a year and it is easy to use, the only thing is that it does not download recordings into a Wav format, a newer version of Mac might. I recently purchased Wavepad software and I am still trying to learn it, have been too spoiled with my beloved Garageband. My Mac is 5 years old and I downloaded Audacity but couldn't use it because my Mac was not compatible with it because it was older. I am sure that your Mac came with Garageband and you should give it a try, it works quite well. If you have any questions on how to do a Voice Over on Garageband, I will be glad to help you.

    As for your read, I would have added some sarcasm with "Humongus TV" and sped it up a bit, it was a little too slow for me. Well, that's what I would have done, I am still learning myself.

    Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't think my "vintage" Mac actually came with Garage Band already installed. I've never been able to find it anywhere in the folders. I think Audacity and a couple of other applications I want to download will have to wait until I buy a newer Mac.
    Thanks for your comments on the read. I might put another recording of it up here and let everyone compare them.

    Peer Feedback:

    +1 on Garageband. Been using it for years at home and on the road.

    hmmm. OSX 10.5 (Leopard) doesn't come with Garageband. I highly suggest you pay the $99 and get a complete OS upgrade for 1,000 reasons - not least of which is that Garageband is included...

    Peer Feedback:

    I inherited my computer from my dad when he died and it's really about nine years old. Although it was able to be upgraded to Leopard, it doesn't support any operating system since then. I'd get the full upgrade immediately if the computer itself would support the new operating system. I'm not very knowledgeable about operating systems but I know that when the newer operating systems came out I read lots of articles saying older computers wouldn't support them at all.

    Peer Feedback:

    The current version of Audacity (2.0.3) is available as a universal binary...which means it will run either on Intel or PowerPC chips. The least operating system they require is 10.4 ...so running Leopard (10.5) should not be an issue. You should be able to download the UB version and use at will. Linked here:

    http://audacity.googlecode.com/files/audacity-macosx-ub-2.0.3.zip

    There are bunches of plug-ins you can get on this page:

    http://audacity.sourceforge.net/download/mac

    You should note on the second link that there's a couple of encoders you'll need to install (painless) in order to save into mp3 format. Audacity is perfect for learning. You'll learn the basics of multi-track recording and the use of plug-ins and other techniques. It's all free and IMO a better thing to learn than GarageBand (which I also have along with Amadeus, Audition 6, Reaper and TwistedWave.) Get the freebie and expand your horizons.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all. I just downloaded Audacity and added the second link for plug-ins to my bookmarks. I'm nothing if not brave so I'll see what happens.

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    Audio-One

    Script:

    So you finally get that humongous TV with the man-eating speakers that apparently goes with your other twelve blinking boxes. Now where the heck are you gonna put them? No one puts the home in home theater like Audio-One. There’s a sale on now!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Robert Fairbairn's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6325/script-recording-23431.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great. The recording quality is definitely there. If anything I would suggest making the first line about 4-5 seconds (you recorded it in 8) with a sense of panic and urgency. They are trying to get the customer that doesnt know how to hook up gear. Then go from there naturally for the rest of the read. If its less than 14 secs thats ok, they'll add sound fx for their name etc. Just some "sound" advice :) lol

    Peer Feedback:

    ferly, I think on this one I'd have withheld the giggle on twelve. Otherwise it sounded good. Where I think you lost it was from "No one" on. It was an enthusiasm crash and burn, and the line with the Client's name in it to boot. The sale is on NOW. Get them in the store with urgency in your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording is great but I'm not rushing out to buy !
    Needs more vibe ! Them blinkin boxes !
    Find a character, try not to be yourself !

    Peer Feedback:

    sounds great until you get to the point where you pitch the product. By going up in pitch at the end of Audio-One and NOW. It sounds like you are uncertain or you are questioning. As far as your character, I though it was great. loved the chuckle, made it like the guy next door was talking to me. Just lost me on "...Audio-One. There’s a sale on now!". You have the guy next door voice! keep practicing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Simply Amazing! GREAT JOB!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi I really like it-- you sound like an everyday guy you could trust. Perhaps you could experiment with really emphasizing Audio-One and drop your voice-- like a statement (instead of a question).

    Hope that helps!

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    Barney's

    Script:

    In Manhattan there’s a landmark community filled with historic brownstones and old-world charm. Its name is Chelsea. And in Chelsea, there’s another landmark, one that’s known throughout the world. Its name is Barney’s. With men’s fashions from here and abroad, a trip to Barney’s is like a tour of the fashion capitals of the world. And since it may be difficult for you to see these spring fashions during the day, we make it easy for you to see them at night. We’re open every night ‘til 9:30, including Saturday. BARNEY’S ... where you’ll see the spring fashions that’ll be seen this year in Paris, Rome, London, and, of course, Chelsea.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I'm trying to push my progress forward a bit to get closer to cutting my commercial demo and to pick spots that I would realistically be sent up for. (I'm feeling the pressure from an agent to get on the stick and get it done.) My purpose with this spot was to try to replicate a real world experience. To do it quickly (within alotted studio time), in one take (let the engineer do clean-up, editing, music bed, etc. later), and get the best single take of the bunch. This is not something, I think, that I would be expected to do in my home studio on my own, so the sound quality is not the issue. (I would be coached and directed by an agent, engineer or director in a professional booth.) I just need to know if the read, itself, was effective. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-48932.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it was James. I realize what you were shooting for on this read and if you were going to go in now and read with a director, you would be pretty well prepped to do that, based on this. You might try also trying on a full production spot of this, directing yourself as you might see it.
    You have a nice measured tone which would be important with this because it would need to be consistent throughout. Could have used a little more smile in some places but you would get that from the director. Your diction is nice and neutral to the text maybe just a tad loose in some spots which you could easily catch in with the engineer. Hope that helps. Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Ted about a smidge more smile being apropos. I would have done a different inflection at "And IN Chelsea" but that's nitpicking. Nice confident delivery. Liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys. Now to get it tighter and in under :30. Gonna concentrate on scripts like this for a while until the demo is done.

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    Benjamin Moore

    Script:

    Benjamin Moore calls it Mellow Yellow. I call it exactly what I wanted. I knew a wanted a warm, comfortable color for my bedroom, but I wasn’t sure which one. A single trip to my Benjamin Moore dealer made it easy to choose.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear chloerobin540's recording

    Please ignore the sound quality - just focusing on performance and pacing!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I loved how you did the first three lines - very conversational and expressive. The last line where you say, "Benjamin Moore dealer," sounds a little bit shaky. It made me feel like you were nervous or uncertain, which takes away from the conversational ease I felt in your first lines. But the last bit, "made it easy to choose" was great again. So I guess I'd say to hit the name of the company/product with confidence and you're golden!

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the flow. It sounds natural and easy going. Great sound quality.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mstrv's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4441/script-recording-34169.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Performance attitude is good... relaxed and friendly.
    Needs more practice on the read, however. Before recording, read the script several times to know where the copy is going. It sounds like that wasn't done. Some "s" sounds were longer than they need to be.
    Recording quality is fair. A bit of echo/tinny sound in the room. Maybe needs more sound deadening material in the room.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice needs a lot more clarity. You sound a bit as if you have pebbles in your cheeks as you read this. Your 's' sounds a slurring a little. Work on clarity.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice however not sure copy is best for voice. Could be a great character voice like grandpa reading to his kids or something. Work on woodshedding the copy for best interpretation and really selling it. At some points you almost sound bored. Look for key words adjectives ("Experienced-knowledgeable), verbs (you'll FIND, going on NOW), and numbers ONE, TWO. Any time something is bold the copy writer is saying PUNCH THIS UP. Also company name.
    HAVE FUN!
    BEST WISHES!
    thanks

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mstrv's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4441/script-recording-34059.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    interesting. I think you could go with a funny spin on this one...you almost sound like you have a Canadian accent (I'm an NHL fan, so I hear it all the time), which could be spun into a funny character for a US audience.
    I hope I'm encouraging, not offending.

    the read was sorta flat, but I could see it directed that way on purpose for a given context or character.

    Keep up the practice and good work,
    Cheers! (eh?)
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I was thinking Native American,, instead of Canadian,, but I agree with the above statment.

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to agree with dfsaund I too felt it was flat. This would be fabulous if you did it as "Da Yoopers". Play with it. Try the humor.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the comments. They are all appreciated. Is there a humorous rewad you could point me to?
    Thank you

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-75547.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Read was great, but I didn't care for the explosion or the latter music, it seemed too close to your voice in volume and pitch, you started to get a bit lost, where you were so clear and on top of the first music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Bean. This is from a TV spot where they did actually explode a wine bottle and had some explosion SFX in there. I might have had too much fun with my explosion though. ;-) The explosion does work with an exploding wine bottle visual.

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    Bolen’s One Step Mulching Mower

    Script:

    Step up to Bolen’s revolutionary One Step Mulching Mower. We called it One Step because when you use it, you never have to rake afterwards. In fact, you couldn’t rake if you tried, because our Mulching Mower has already recycled the extra-tiny grass clippings--mulch--back into your lawn. There, it’s useful as an organic fertilizer. All this simply means that the job is done in 40% less time. So waste no time taking advantage of our nationwide sale. Look for the revolutionary ONE STEP MULCHING MOWER at BOLEN’S dealers everywhere.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear becatchingyou's recording

    Is my level too hot?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-143801/script-recording-107547.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I do not know if it just my computer, but I only have audio coming out of my left heaphone. I am not an expert in tech but the level isn't too hot in my opinion.

    Peer Feedback:

    The pace seemed too fast and therefore emphasis was lost in certain portions. Liked the intonational change in the closing. The recording also had an echo that detracted.

    Peer Feedback:

    Make sure that you aren't recording in stereo if you're using only one microphone (which you should be if you're recording vocals). Recording in mono will fix the problem of only having audio coming out of the left channel :)

    Level sounded fine for your level of projection.

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    Boost Mobile 2

    Script:

    I don’t want commitments. Let me pay what I want, when I want. PayGo Basic from Boost mobile has no monthly payments and no activation fees.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    I have 2 takes and a new mic and new ProTools (which I am still trying to figure out). Which take do you like better? Why?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117688/script-recording-99447.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello. I like the 2nd take a little better. It sounds more conversational and relaxed. Mic must be set up well; sound is good, no reverb. Good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you're going to do more than one take, at the very least, put a slight pause (a beat or two) between them or say. "Take one" and "Take two" etc. Because if I didn't know the copy or weren't reading along, I would have thought that this was one long spot.

    There is an ever-so-slight room echo. More noticeable when you are louder.

    Not a criticism, buy why ProTools?

    I prefer the 1st take - more energy and more attitude.

    The recording quality is a little dull, especially the S's. If you're concerned with sibilants and used a de-esser plugin, you went too far with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    i liked the 2nd one better. Only thing I can think of is hitting "PayGo Basic" more. I was not excited to use PayGo Basic.

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    Bounce

    Script:

    Open up to a fresh new feeling. New Bounce Fabric Refresher sprays odors out of all your fabrics and leaves a gentle freshness throughout your home everyday. Bounce Fabric Refresher. The start of something fresh.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear phillipsrh's recording

    Looking for any suggestions. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1576/script-recording-22995.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Phillip, overall a good read, with nice and friendly tone, good for commercial work. Remember to keep color in mind as you read, especially descriptive words like gentle freshness, which you moved through pretty quickly in this take. Again, a good overall read and nice music choice too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow love it!
    I would just say slow down a tad and pronounce the words "Gentle" and "Refresh(er)"

    GREAT JOB!
    I'd hire ya!

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    Bounty

    Script:

    Introducing Bounty Double Quilted! Each sheet is quilted once. Then quilted again, making it the strongest 2-ply paper towel. And there are twice as many sheets on a roll. More sheets that can do more jobs than you ever thought possible. New Bounty Double Quilted.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    Working on being upbeat/bouncy, but smooth... while being quick paced to stay conversational. Thanks for your feedback! ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Bounty.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Melanie,

    You have a very nice, clear voice! You needed to add more emotion, sounded a little robotic. Example, the word "strongest" make the word stand out, also "And there are twice as many sheets on a roll" Be excited when you say this, the customer wants more for their money. Coloring your words will bring the copy to life. I am still learning myself, and have to get back into the swing of things. I have been away from this forum for several weeks and not practiced as much as I wanted to.

    Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Melanie - nice tone of voice, but as Carol said, needs lots more energy. You recorded in 18 seconds. I'm thinking this is a 15 second spot. Perhaps get more energetic in the read and try to do in 15 seconds. The faster pace might help. Good luck! Marianne

    Peer Feedback:

    Huh. I'm listening and reading the comments, and something's funky for me. I think, yes, speed it up a little, but I hear plenty of pitch variation for my taste. Tone seems right to me, but it's like your words are slurring together in a way I don't usually hear on your reads. I'd pull back from the smoothness and find some midway point between it and your usual articulation.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback! I listened back and agree. I-am-not-a-robot... and don't want to sound like one. I gave it more energy and color and am resubmitting it -hopefully I got it right this time.
    ~Melanie

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording quality and voice were both nice and clear. One specific thing I would suggest in your enunciation is on the word "making". Even in conversation most people don't drop the G at the end of the word. "making" not "makeen".

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    This is a retake - a little faster, with more energy and some words colored to help convey my enthusiasm about these amazing paper towels! Thanks for your feedback and comments. ~Melanie

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Bounty-Take2.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this and the changes! I wasn't positive on the choice of the first pivot, wondering if "double" should be pitched up. I liked the flow and changes of inflection in the second sentence. I liked, too, the variation in how your sentences ended. The choice to not pivot the final product name worked for me since you'd already done it. I'd just say for negative criticism that your voice sounds a little strained, like there's some vocal tension. Are you speaking in too high a register as you bump up the intensity? Dunno...Just brainstorming...

    Peer Feedback:

    And that "too smooth" quality I mentioned on your other take is definitely abolished without things getting choppy. Nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Tonia - for the initial analysis and the follow up feedback.
    You might be right about the strain being tied to a higher register, but it's not too high for me. I use that voice in natural conversation so I'm not sure what the hang up is.
    My natural range is a little lower. But I tend to struggle for energy in the lower register. No problem with smooth and sexy but happy upbeat energy is a bit more of a stretch. Anyway, I'll keep practicing both.

    I really appreciate all of the feedback - very valuable!

    ~Melanie

    Peer Feedback:

    The speed and energy are fine, but I would try to see if you could make it less "announcery" and more "conversational". If you pick and audience of one that is a real person in your life you can identify with and who you might even really talk to about the product it might help with giving it that "conversational" tone that seems to be never out of place these days for commercial copy. You can also try and think for yourself of a moment before the copy starts and possibly even put words to it as a lead in, so the beginning of the spot doesn't just sound like you're reading copy. You can either vocalize the lead in and then edit it out or just say it to your self and then transition into the copy.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lohson's recording

    Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100296/script-recording-90279.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey! The more I heard, the more I really enjoyed your performance. I think you did a lot of things right, but where you could improve is put a little more emotion into what your reading. Make yourself not just an announcer, but an owner of this Bowflex Extreme. It is really where I struggle too, but take a moment to visualize your audience and then connect with them before you start reading.

    Peer Feedback:

    It does sound a little announcery. There is some call for that style, but very little now a days. And it's a little "sell-y".

    Who are you relating this message to? What age group? What single person? Who is that guy or gal who would benefit from using a Bowflex Extreme?

    You need to relate to these people on a personal level, but not "sell" to them. You want to persuade them in a sincere and friendly way that they will benefit from the results they'll get from using this amazing gadget.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear DonJacobVO's recording

    The store belongs to my better half and I am bartering for Liners, stingers and badging at a small radio station. This is the first commercial I've done. Please be as honest as you wish. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-149001/script-recording-106747.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your folksy and friendly delivery but I think the script could use some revision. It doesn’t answer an essential question in my mind: why would I want to come to this outlet? Could you give some specific examples of items I might find there? Or categories of items? I would lead with this and include location and business hours toward the end. Including Kat adds to the family/friendly/welcoming feel. I would not include the echo at the end. Good luck with your business arrangement. Have fun and thank you for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    billanciaux- Thank you, I really appreciate your feedback! This will help a great deal in making a better spot. The client, Kat, agrees with you. especially the part about her! Ha ha. All the best to you ! Don

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Don,
    the recording sounds great and you sound very natural. The only thing that really pops out at me is the difference between "but don't be afraid to stop by sooner" and "Hi, I'm Kat." I'm not sure if it'll pick up on the radio, but it sounds like she got closer to the mic for the second line and the delivery sounds a bit different (not bad, it just feels like 2 different takes). If you have time, you might consider trying to grab those lines again together. I realize the timing on the commercial is really tight though since you're at the full 30 seconds.
    I also agree with the other comment about the echo. I don't dislike it but it sounds like it gets cut off at the very end so I'd maybe try a couple mixes with less echo.
    Overall it sounds great and you should be proud

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Henry Dewing's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6638/script-recording-27113.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Looking for a male VO for Radio Spot
    Hi.
    This time Im looking for a Male VO for a Radio spot. Needs to sound between 50's and 80's.
    Budget $350. Non Union.
    If you want to be part of the casting, please send me an email to production@thegoodsound.com and we'll provide the casting specs.
    Hi Henry.
    Just saw this job listing and thought of you.
    Later

    Peer Feedback:

    Good morning, Jerry. You're on.

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    Callaway Golf Clubs

    Script:

    The club that changed everything is once again changing the way the game is played. The most beloved titanium driver in the history of golf has a new look, new technology, and new distance-enhancing features. Great Big Bertha is Back! From Callaway Golf.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Geoffrey Ivan's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-153106/script-recording-107277.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Geoffrey. That's the way to billboard the product name! I liked your emotion/energy overall. Note the way you end sentences on "the game is played" and "distance-enhancing features." Similar. To me, almost like you are throwing those phrases away. Solid recording quality. Thanks, Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    The recording quality sounds a bit tinny/metallic to me. Otherwise, great job. You sound perfect for this type of read.

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    Canon Card Photo Printer

    Script:

    Pictures without film. Prints without a computer. What's this world coming to? Ditch your computer. The Canon Card Photo Printer CP-100 connects right to your PowerShot digital camera. It gives you photographic-quality prints with 300-dpi resolution. And rich, true colors. For credit card and 4 by 6 inch print sizes that you can create anywhere, in less than 90 seconds. And all settings are adjusted on the camera's LCD monitor. The only thing easier, is taking the picture.
    See the Canon Card Photo Printer CP-100 online at PowerShot.com or call us at 1-800-OK-Canon.
    Canon, digital that inspires.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear teresalumini's recording

    This week's Voice Over Homework was to practice Retail spots with technical jargon! Please ignore sound quality and any background noise I'm open to any suggestions and helpful feedback :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-137296/script-recording-102945.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You handled the technical jargon just fine. And, you committed yourself to being very enthusiastic with all three takes. Takes 1 and 2 sounded very similar. Take 3 powered it down a bit and there were slight variations. The pacing I felt, could be a bit slower. Not slowing it down tremendously, but remembering that a listener will not have the script in front of them, so be sure to allow the listener to digest the facts about the camera. When reading a .com or giving a phone number, it’s always good to slow those down. Visualize someone writing them down. Watch for glottal stops. For example, in sentence 5 there was a pause before “connects”. Try reading that sentence straight through without any stops. In take 3, you read it right through and it sounded great.

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    Carhart - Hands

    Script:

    Some say we've lost our touch, that we're not the same people we once were.
    That we don't build things with lasting details or worse ..that we just don't bother, really ..we the people who built a country, who rely on ourselves to get things done.. well, there's really only one way to tell if we've lost our grip. Next time you see someone wearing Carhart , just shake their hand.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mjc55's recording

    First posting of a commercial script for me. Let me know what you think.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-5941/script-recording-29951.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello there,

    The recording quality sounds good enough for an audition at least. And I thought the read was nice. I guess my only problem is that I'm not sure what this is actually supposed to be a commercial for haha. I might be able to offer better critiques if I understood the goal of the ad.

    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice work, Michael. I could totally hear this as a TV spot.

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    Carhart

    Script:

    Some say we've lost our touch, that we're not the same people we once were.
    That we don't build things with lasting details or worse ..that we just don't bother, really ..we the people who built a country, who rely on ourselves to get things done.. well, there's really only one way to tell if we've lost our grip. Next time you see someone wearing Carhart , just shake their hand.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TimE13's recording

    I am practicing my cold reads. Just picked out the script and recorded it. Let me know about delivery, mouth noise and quality of sound. Thank you TimE13

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13606/script-recording-62446.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Actually your cold read isn't bad at all. Now I'm talking about a cold read. It's destined for the trash heap. That's what you do with cold reads but not before analyzing what's wrong with it. Once you've figured out what's wrong, you've figured out what to work on. Then re-imagine how to express those words or thoughts. Record again and start attritioning what isn't working. Yeah, I know you want to practice doing it cold, but if you don't follow a process to get to what is good you won't get there at all. The more you do this little exercise the the quicker you'll pick up on what a copy should sound like from the get go. The people who nail the cold reads are the people who have practiced extensively with all the various vocal tools ie pace, pitch, pausing, inflection, characterizations, and pull those things out of their internal tool box as needed. You know when you need a crescent wrench or when a ratchet would be better. You know that because you've worked with tools before. Consequently when you see the job you know just what tool works best. It's no different.
    This piece went south at "really". You take it from there.

    Peer Feedback:

    An announcer-sounding read. No connection to the prideful script making the point carhart and americans in general are still capable of delivering the goods.

    Peer Feedback:

    Richurd and TxTom, thank you very much for your constructive advise. I will work on the pacing, pitch, inflection, tone and attitude of the script. Be prideful but not boastfull or announcer type. Thanks. I will we redo soon.

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a little different (different product and a little of an accent), but watch Tommy Lee Jones's Ameriprise commercials.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=y89cfmPJUwg

    That's the kind of attitude this script could use. "We're tough. We're Americans. We can't be beaten."

    I betcha Tommy is even wearing Cathart.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've got two Carhartt shirts. Made in the Phillipines. Must be counterfeit. :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    According to my search, the Philippines is (or was) a U.S. territory,

    http://wiki.answers.com/Q/Is_the_philippines_us_territory

    and as such, by law, products made there are within their purview to be considered "Made in America." The gray area is whether, as stated in the link, that since the island was granted full independence in 1946, that their ties to the U.S. are completely severed and that still holds true.

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    Change

    Script:

    This is slow spaced dramatic read. It should be a slow pace at first and then build to more drama.

    Sample Script:

    Change
    It's the only constant.
    It starts with a step.
    A thought.
    An inspiration.
    Change is an opportunity.
    An evolution
    A transformation.
    It's the way you feel about yourself.
    How you see the world.
    And what the world's left with when you're gone.

    (building energy/pace)

    Change is in our nature. In our DNA.
    It's what MAKES us healthy.
    It's what drives us.
    Change is taking that step to better yourself.
    and the world around you.

    (Resolving back to lower energy)
    So what are you waiting for?

    healthy change starts now.

    Take that step.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear jneiblum's recording

    I am looking for comments regarding general delivery. How is the pacing? The tone? How is the recording? Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-107139/script-recording-107550.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the choices you made throughout the script. It was smooth in the begining, but the tempo could be slowed down a little bit more. Just for the begining though your change of tempo at the tonal shift were great. While I would prefer a more subtle and extended build up of energy, you hit the objective with showing change in the tone and energy. In addition, dropping it back down to the smooth resolving tone and pace was excellent.

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    Chewy.com

    Script:

    Hey Pet Lovers! At Chewy.com you can shop from over 500 brands of pet food and supplies all from the comfort of home with fast free 1-2 day home delivery. So to you, Chewy.com is an easy way to shop, and to your pet it’s a dream come true. Save 20% on your favorite brands today. Shop online at Chewy.com

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Brittanyjklein's recording

    I am getting back into voiceover training after a 2 year hiatus. This is a practice recording that I am using as a benchmark to see what I need to work on. Take it easy on me please :)

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-101449/script-recording-99514.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the pacing and the energy, I just say maybe back off the mic a little?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Chris! Yes - after playing this back, it sounds like I could definitely back off the mic. I didn't trust that my iPhone would pick up the sound, but it clearly did. Any other feedback you have is welcome also.

    Peer Feedback:

    Not a bad read. You sound experienced. Pace definitely needed to be sped up. (Did you do this all in one take?)

    However, all the breathing, mic popping, and mouth clicks, distracted from the performance.
    But those are very easy to fix.

    Nice job. welcome back.
    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback! Yes - I did this all in one take with no editing. Dave - during editing, how would you speed this up? By taking out pauses? Any tips on editing are appreciated. I need some serious help there!

    Peer Feedback:

    It's tough to speed up the pace during editing. The right place to do it is in the booth. When you read the script, give yourself 3 or more good solid takes with different paces and experiment. Understand the flow of the script and make sure your takes will connect smoothly.

    Once you have enough recorded material to work with, editing skills will stitch them together, and that really depends on a sharp ear. I know this sounds glib, but it's a lot like "Hey Mister, how do I get to Carnegie Hall?" Practice. Lots of practice.

    there are some tools that could be used during editing that can adjust pacing, depending on your DAW, but those require advanced editing skills to be used properly, IMHO.

    hope that helps,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bigviclevickas's recording

    Hello, this is a very rough copy of a spot I did in school and would like feedback on voice quality and potential. Thanks

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100446/script-recording-78460.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    To me, the background washes out your words at points.

    Peer Feedback:

    I found this really entertaining to listen to - it sounded really natural, like something I might hear on my TV (if I ever watched the thing). It was conversational and had that kind of Southern-but-not-really twang that made it approachable without being silly or hard to understand. To get nitpicky, I think that ending tagline - "the one kind of food for both kinds of dogs" - MIGHT stand to get a slightly longer pause between "food" and "for," as well as more emphasis on "one" and "both," as they're meant to contrast, I believe. The whole thing sounded nice, but I feel like the tagline could have used a touch more color.

    As CherylLinn mentioned, the background noises probably were just a bit too loud, but I think that's more something the engineer would take care of. There was also some fuzz in the recording, but I see you've asked for comments on your performance rather than recording quality, so I suppose that's something you're in the process of figuring out.

    Peer Feedback:

    As far as the sound quality goes - It sounds to me like one of those YouTube videos that someone recorded from their TV on their tablet or cell phone, kind of a "second hand" recording, a bit muffled and not very "clean". What are you using for a bit rate and sample rate? That may be effecting the overall quality of the recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Beneath the noise, I hear a very talented voice. Good interpretation with a "everyman" appeal. Sounds like someone who's actually working on a chuck wagon. Nice.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lohson's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100296/script-recording-90320.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you floor noise is pretty high. I can hear the hissing sound during the take. The tone seems right and I like the style of your voice. What are you using for a booth? And mic wise?

    Peer Feedback:

    I felt like I heard a lot of high pitch so a lot of the delivery ends up being repetitive. Try to change it up by lowering it, extending certain words or changing the tempo of a sentence slightly. For instance the "184 sizes" line seemed to be a little too fast and could have benefited from an emphasis on the number of sizes or widths.

    Think of answering someone's question in store and really trying to sell them on how professional grade you guys are.

    "We not only check the length...it's the length AND width." A subtle emphasis on "and" could make a good deal of difference. Subtle changes like that can add needed variety to the copy and continue to grab the listeners attention.

    I can hear you tried to change up the "heels, ankles, arch" bit which was good so the list doesn't sound generic.

    Peer Feedback:

    The noise level is pretty high here. I'm also hearing words not being completed in their full pronunciation. It's probably due to your personal regionalism or dialect. Practice can overcome that tendency. For instance, you did a glottal stop on "supporT" (left any touch on the last t out) and chilD (came out as "chile")

    The technical aspects can be addressed as you practice and progress. But you definitely should work on the full delivery of all the syllables...and the FUN part is to NOT overly emphasize the difference. Good luck and keep practicing.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Thanks for the kind words and the sage advice, everybody. I reopened the session, changing the music and making the first three words more evenly spaced. Better? Please let me know. Thanks, again! Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-28145.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep, I like the spacing better.. it would be nice, if you had both versions up, to compare. Where do you find your music . both pieces of music were very nice. This once again is totally air-able in my opinion.

    Peer Feedback:

    Certifiable home run. It's just plain good. I liked the fact that you didn't let the humor get in the way of treating the product seriously.

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    Clothing Store

    Script:

    Nothing should come between a man and his suit.

    Except a great wrinkle-free shirt.

    Stay crisp from morning ‘til night in Traveler wrinkle-free dress shirts. Now, three for just $99.

    And only at Joseph A. Bank

    The new tradition since 1905

    92 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear ChristianMerritt27's recording

    Hi Everyone, I've recently jumped into the VO world, getting training from various coaches and getting a commercial demo made. I'm now in the process of auditioning on P2P sites, but I'm wondering if my audio is up to par for auditions. I've had minor experience with EQ and compression, but I don't have a professional ear to give feedback on how it sounds. The attached file are the settings I've been using on my auditions. Does it sound too compressed or boom-y? Any tips on how to give it a crisp sound would be phenomenal. The plugins I used are: RVox Mono, Izotope Nectar, EQ frequency, Izotope Declicker. Using Adobe Audition as my DAW. Thanks guys, your feedback is appreciated!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-99300/script-recording-83534.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Doesn't sound too compressed or boomy, but to my untrained ear, it DOES sound like there's a bit of noise reduction going on there, and the top end treble seems a tiny bit harsh to me. Nothing that stands out though.

    I know you didn't ask for performance feedback, but for what it's worth, I greatly prefer the third read by a long way!

    Peer Feedback:

    @lardconcepts - Yeah, I have a gate threshold set at -39 for some louder than normal noise floor. I'll take a look at the treble too.

    Thanks for the performance review as well! =)

    Peer Feedback:

    The S's are a bit sibilant and sharp. There's a de-esser in the Nectrar chain. You might play around with that a little. Put it in the chain before compression and EQ.

    Compression kind of "squashes" the sound, limiting the upper end of the dB range so you don't peg. But if you've recorded too hot to begin with, then compression just takes some character out of your voice's dynamic range. Don't set it above a 3:1 ratio. 2:1 - 2.5:1 is good for VO - fast attack and automatic release (if your compressor has that feature), otherwise give it a moderate release so the compressor doesn't act like a noise gate and shut the sound down too quickly - it will cause a "pumping" effect.

    You might think about shelling out some bucks (a tax deduction if you're making money as a VO artist) to George Whittam to create a stack for you. He'll take a raw recording (no NR or processing FX) and give you suggestions as to your processing chain and what order to place things in it. You might be doing overkill.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hard to add critique to the previous statements, which cover off the recording nicely. Too much processing amigo...let's hear a raw take.

    Peer Feedback:

    CJ -
    these are nice takes. they have a nice sound, pace, and tone. But something is taking the final polish off of them.
    you're dropping the ending 't' sounds. Like on "...man and his sue-h", or "wrinkle-free dress shir-h"...."from morning till nigh..."
    you even drop the 't' in slating your name "Merri..h"
    it's like the 't' is replaced by a glottal stop. it's too far back in your throat, instead of being right up front and crisp.

    regarding your recording quality, I think it's fine. a studio engineer could easily work with it. maybe add a little more high end to reduce the slight muddiness.

    hope that's helpful, cheers,
    DS.

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    Crate and Barrel

    Script:

    Could this be the perfect chair? Well, let’s see. A style that compliments any décor. A size that’s big enough to lounge in, small enough to tuck away in a corner. And a price that just might be the best economic news you’ve heard all year. Is “Grace” the perfect chair? Could be. You’ll find it only at Crate and Barrel.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear sclevine's recording

    This is my first practice recording (recorded in the Don Lafontaine VO Lab). Would love any and all feedback!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-69536/script-recording-79630.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The words were very clearly annunciated, and there was a lot of feeling. At the phrase "the best economic news", you sounded like you were ready to jump out of the chair. Tone that part down somewhat. Nice job.
    Mike W.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone for this piece. Overall, perhaps some of the pauses could be eliminated to speed up the pace just a tad? On the second sentence, "well" is swallowed. At first, I thought it was missed but it's like, "wlet's see." Pitch changes worked well to me. Maybe a little more emphasis on Grace so that it stands out as the product.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the pauses and swallowing "well"

    and it was good for a nice sunny delivery...but I missed a little eyebrow wiggling and tease in your delivery, like....everything you've ever wanted in a chair... here it is, come and get it! I think that would have made some of the specs stand out, instead of just the price, which is all I really left with.

    You've got great pitch variation and solid fundamentals.

    Peer Feedback:

    What a great sound you have. Playful and punchy and perfect pauses. One of the best female voices on here presently. Thanks

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    Crawford's Menswear

    Script:

    Do you wake up every morning looking like your mommy dressed you? You're nearly a grown man! It's not exactly the image you want to have, is it? Well, mom can scratch that chore off of her list when you tell her that you'll be buying your own clothes from now on by yourself at Crawford's Menswear. Crawford's style is your style. Get outfitted by Crawford's for almost any occasion including going to class, business casual for work interviews, and of course, clothes to hang out in with the guys. Ready to dress like a man? Hit Crawford's on the corner of Third and Craig, and dress to impress.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jerome460's recording

    This is one of the scripts I am thinking about choosing for my demo. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated. I have been working on trying to having more energy and project more personality in my delivery.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/STE-070.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a nice spot. You have to cut it down to 10 - 15 seconds if you want to leave room for many more spots on your demo. Think about re-writing it. The premise is really very humorous. Mentioning "mommy" once should be enough to make the point. Really emphasize that word and then get to the point. Getting outfitted at Crawford's Menswear makes you a man! Of course, mention the store, but you might do away with the address so that it sounds more like a national spot rather a one-off local clothing store. Very rarely does a demo include an entire commercial, unless the talent wants the listener to know that it was a spot they actually booked and they are very proud of it.

    You added some words "Do you wake up every morning AND SHOW UP looking..." And really needle this guy that you're talking to (the wuss). Give him some attitude. Like a football coach trying to toughen up a 90 pound weakling.

    Here's a suggestion for a script edit. It has all of the points without rambling on.

    "Do you wake up every morning looking like your mommy dressed you? Now, that’s not exactly the image you want to have, is it? BE A MAN! Get outfitted for almost any occasion at Crawford’s Menswear. Dress to impress!"

    I timed it out at about 11 seconds without rushing.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys, the feedback is greatly appreciated! I will definitely work to implement what has been suggested.

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    Crawford's Menswear

    Script:

    Crawford’s Menswear:

    Do you wake up every morning and show up looking like your mommy dressed you?

    You’re nearly a grown man! It’s not exactly the image you want to have, is it?

    Well, mom can scratch that chore off her list when you tell her that you’ll be buying your own clothes from now on by yourself at Crawford’s Menswear.

    Crawford style is your style.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jonathantcoleman's recording

    Second community upload! Working on natural conversational tone, without sacrificing emotion and character.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7328/script-recording-45453.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, I liked it a lot. Your voice reminds me of this guy, but without the accent: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RAIFOR0Tmyw

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved it!!! The only tiny thing I would say is that maybe 'Crawford Menswear' was rushed slightly and as this is the brand you may want to give both words equal value. Great timing! Niki

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice clarity and tone. Consider the pace though...this is most likely a 30s spot. You could have slowed the pace a LITTLE and still left some bumper time at the end and ended at 30. Good recording quality.

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    Dave's Audio Cylinderworks and Sriracha Boutique

    Script:

    Cd's and MP3's sound great, but they're just so sterile; where's the humanity? Certainly not in vinyl—that's just plastic. No, we need the genuine artifact— that's right, the Edison Cylinder. At Dave's Audio CylinderWorks and Sriracha Boutique, we custom-handcraft wax cylinders of your favourite music, so it can be enjoyed the way nature intended. Your listening experience will be so much richer when your favourite obscure cuts are not only underscored with the hiss of nature's background noise, but sprinkled with the boxy, organic pops and scratches that only natural wax can provide. Speaking of wax, we make ours from the finest free-trade, Carpathian-mined ozokerite, with a supplement of organic beeswax. You should also pick up one of our manually operated cylinder players, handmade from beetlepine and salvaged iron. Dave's Audio CylinderWorks and Sriracha Boutique. You can hear the Authenticity. Located at Burnside and 5th in Portland.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Waltonia's recording

    Here's a late-night TV spot for the hipsters. Besides just for fun, I was also working on reducing mouth and nasal noise.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-111483/script-recording-89281.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm not detecting much (if any) mouth noise. But there is still some nasal clicking happening. However, I may have a suggestion.

    I snore. And that problem basically stems from the same source as your (and my) nasal clicks and buzzes - the collapsing of the soft palate at the back top of your mouth, causing your uvula to close off the airway and force more air up through your nasal passages. Sometimes that "click" is the uvula slapping against the back of the tongue. (OK. Enough of the anatomy lesson.)

    (As a classically trained singer, my training taught me how to raise that soft palate, along with good breath support, for my singing voice to resonate. I actually did exercises for that purpose. Now, it's just muscle memory. However, when I get lazy or I'm tired or when my concentration slips, I sometimes fall back into bad habits and I get that click or a nasal buzz. I can actually see it in the wave form. Sometimes it's edit-able, sometimes not.)

    I tried Breathe Right nasal strips (for the snoring), but found them relatively ineffective - and they left a sticky residue on the bridge of my nose, made it very sore and left red marks there, and sometimes they fell off in the middle of the night and stuck to my pillow or in my hair. A real PITA!

    Then I discovered this product:

    http://www.cvs.com/shop/health-medicine/sleep-snoring-aids/snoring-aids/...

    I even tried it in the booth while recording and it helped.

    I also use nasal saline to open up my nasal passages (because I have severe allergies at this time of the year) and to cut down on excessive mucus (snot), and that helps. I call it my "nasal douche".

    http://www.cvs.com/shop/health-medicine/cough-cold-flu/nasal-care/cvs-sa...

    Inexpensive solutions that may help you as well.

    Very nice delivery. The only suggestion I might make is to try it a little "dryer" - more tongue in cheek - and don't try to "pull the funny", but just let it happen. Robb Webb (the guy that used to do the DirecTV spots and is the voice of CBS Network Promos such 60 minutes) is known as the "King of the Deadpan Read." I attended a seminar with him at the SAG Foundation VO Lab in NYC a while back (really nice guy, BTW), and he is quite physically animated behind the mic. But you'd never know it from just listening to him. He's constantly moving with hands and making facial gestures. Amazing to watch and very funny. But the delivery is understatedly flat and dry, which makes it even funnier. It's the "less is more" concept of acting.

    Recording quality is really good.

    Do you write these scripts yourself? They're quite amusing.

    And oh, hey. If you're going for a 60 second spot (because you came in at 51 seconds already), slow it down a touch and really give me a chance to understand what I'm hearing. "Did he really say that wax cylinders are better than digital or vinyl? You mean I have to actually crank the machine to hear the sound. And the sound has all kinds of noises in it? WTF?"

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. Yes, I wrote this one myself; I get a kick out of making up ads that are ridiculous but almost conceivable (like the Nu-Vile and Bragado spots). Of course, the down side is I don't get the practice of trying to figure out where the client is coming from and what they expect. I wasn't necessarily going for a time limit, but I might try your deadpan Robb Webb approach--it would easily fit the 60-seconds, and it sounds fun. I listened to one of those DTV spots--deadly serious, with a touch of old school radio news guy (?). I did find myself wondering what my delivery should be. I kind of went for the fast-paced, late-night spot sound, but I think it was just because the script seemed to lend itself to that style.
    Seriously, thanks for the tips on the nasal stuff. I think all of them are exactly what I need--I think the allergy season here isn't helping and a good douche is in order. I will also be working on the soft palate control as well. You and me, maybe we just have huge, low-swinging uvulas (the "throat junk" as they call it in vulgar street parlance)--maybe we should just be proud of our endowments. ; )

    Peer Feedback:

    Ha, ha.

    Yeah, the exercises that I used to do to raise the soft palate are gross, but effective.

    Stick your tongue out as far as it will go with as wide a mouth as you can - like the biggest yawn you can achieve. Then do the same, only keeping your tongue in your mouth, but as flat to the bottom as possible, while dropping your lynx. You should really feel your soft palate rise and stretch. But don't over do it - maybe just 5 or 10 repetitions at a time spaced out over about 3 sessions a day.

    You could even breathe in and out and your throat should feel like a big open pipe.

    Don't necessarily try to imitate Robb Webb, but just get the "flavor" of the delivery. Like you're the expert. And why would anyone want to listen to recordings any other way? It's a no-brainer to you. That mater-of-fact, almost deadpan innocence is what makes it funny. And as far as timing goes, you don't necessarily have to fill the entire 60 seconds, but stretch this out a little, have fun and play with it.

    Wanna write some stuff fer me?

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent. I'll try both those things (the stretches and the Webb version).
    Write a piece for you? It'd be the least I could do after all your time and help. Perhaps something with a snooty accent/diction juxtaposed with a low-brow element, like a butler service for new-money white trash, or maybe the opposite of Bragado--an actual hamper of white kittens for those who can afford it! I just have to figure out what they do with the kitten after they wipe.

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    49 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear c_velez's recording

    Thanks for taking the time to listen to the recording. I'm mainly interested in knowing if the quality of my voice is something that would appeal to agents seeking talent in the VOR industry. Anything you can tell me about tone, timbre, and pacing would be greatly appreciated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-132922/script-recording-98413.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the tone and pacing were good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I also thought the tone and pacing were good. I thought the mic level or plosives on 'perfect' was too much - are you using a pop screen? On 'visit' I think you paused just a tad to much 'visit diamonds are forever.com' is more of a complete thought (IMHO). Great Job overall.

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    Downy

    Script:

    You're time is valuable.
    Why waste it ironing
    Downy Wrinkle Releaser
    Spray, tug and smooth.

    40 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SandwichTone's recording

    I experimented with music. Looking for a national quality. Thanks in advance!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-9054/script-recording-30560.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, SandwichTone. You sound great. If you need someone to judge whether or not this is "national quality," you might want to pay Edge for Pro Feedback. Great deal for only $29. I notice you said "Yer time is valuable" and am wondering if that first word should be pronounced with a more open "o", if that makes sense.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it overall, but it definitely seemed like a TV spot to me. If I had some visuals to go with the music and read, I think it would have been perfect. Having said that, it seemed to leave me wanting since the read has pauses and the music bed doesn't make up for the gaps with any meaningful contribution to the spot.

    The vocal quality was very good and clear.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey thanks GG for your ear, It was a read for tv. Helpful for me to read the feedback with regard to the music. appreciate it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sandwich Tone! Where have you been?

    Good to from you and in regards to the script, I love your voice and the music bed was great, but the pauses could have been shorter. I also have a tendency to pause within my scripts to create a certain effect, but some times it can alter the script whereas it doesn't sound right. However this was a good read from you and I enjoyed it.

    Are you still doing Animation VO's? If you're familiar with Computer Graphics and Animation; create a cartoon character and add your voice so you can get an idea as to how it will sound and look. Because I know with your talent, one day your voice will part of a Pixar film! LOL!!!

    Best wishes,
    LCW.

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    Duluth Trading Company

    Script:

    Mother Nature. She can be mean. Wild. Even downright cranky. At Duluth Trading, our outerwear, born of nor’easters, blizzards and gale force winds is designed and tested by the tradesmen who wear it themselves. Because we know, when Nature’s a Mother, you’ll be out there…workin’ up a storm.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This is another script I gleaned from from a catalogue that I've been getting for many years. Didn't think many people knew about them. I showed this script to my wife. One day she called me downstairs from my man cave just in time to see a Duluth commercial on the TV! They've just gone national recently. This is another one that I've scrapped for my demo. Liked the copy, though, and wanted to post it anyway. It was fun to do.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-48013.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James. i think this sounds a bit "broadcaster-ish". Not like a city worker who would wear them while actually working in the environment clearing snow giving a testimonial. Just my 2 cents on this one. My wife tells me i'm wrong all the time about everything ... so who knows!

    Peer Feedback:

    I can't decide if you're trying to sound like a workin' man...a little more casual with the dialect...because I hear "workin' up a storm" but in most of it, you're not carrying the same vibe. Dan's called it...a little too announcery to carry off the casual working man delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James! I love your rich voice and the clarity is fantastic, but I do agree with Tom and Daniel that there is an inconsistency with the delivery; I don't know who you are. The language is quite colloquial and this is reflected in your delivery when you say "cranky", "Nature’s a Mother" and "workin’ up a storm" but the rest of the time it feels (IMO) that you are being too careful with your articulation, it doesn't have that conversational feel. You said you had fun with the copy, and it is a great piece, but I don't really sense that coming through. When I looked up their adverts on YouTube they are very tongue-in-cheek and I think you could develop a great character for this read. I really feel it needs a bit more personality injected into it, I loved the way you said cranky, but I felt there were missed opportunities for "mean" and "wild". Anyway, those are my thoughts, maybe useful, maybe not! All the best, Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James, just wanted to say that I agree with the previous comments. Check this out. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-7YU8pbANJs

    Peer Feedback:

    OK. Reality check. I wanted to do Sam Elliot. Or the guy that actually does these spots. Chalk it up to bad immitation. Just thought it would be fun.

    In my coaching session last week, we discussed the types of products and scripts I should be focusing on and/or how to treat the text I'm handed. I'm going to attempt to get back to that.

    Thanks guys for nudging me back on the road.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-72552.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    touzet --
    sounds great. I like the production -- I'm really interested in the dynamics that you add to the sound - particularly the compression. it has a pro sounding thickness and grittiness. (are you using a simulated FET compressor of some sort? do you add some EQ hi end back in?)

    I think the southern accent works with this spot, and I really like the pace - very patient.

    you've got skills. really nice job.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dave,
    Thanks for pulling my tracks out of the "Awaiting Feedback" bucket.
    Also, thanks for the kind words. I'm using a small Alesis Compressor on input
    these days. There's a tiny bit of top end going in and I don't usually add anything
    later. There was some EQ on the Jack Daniels track but this one was left alone.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the grittiness of the vintage sound in this too, the vocal bit. Sounds good for this style. Nice-

    Peer Feedback:

    Touzet --
    which Alesis are you using? the 3630? or 3632?
    it sounds great, but I'm reading a lot of caveats for the Alesis in head-to-head reviews. I think they are mostly referring to tracking instruments and singing vocals, though. VO is probably less demanding and doesn't push a comp to its distortion envelope.

    whatever you're using, now you've got me interested too.
    what pre-amp do you use in front of it?

    if you don't mind, send me an email at dfsaund@yahoo.com.
    thanks!
    DS.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    This is a remix of a mock commercial I did a while back. The previous one was done before I built my booth, so the VO sound quality wasn't nearly as good then. I want to use this as an example of my engineering ability and the quality of production from my home studio should I be required to provide a completely mixed down spot for broadcast. It will be going up on one of the audition services that I subscribe to as an example of my work.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-90408.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    James - Great use of sound effects and very-well-mixed output. Wasn't sure about the saw/sneeze one, and that distracted me a little, but the rest were spot-on - especially the very last one. Wow - way to leave the listener smiling!

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it sounds fantastic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,

    If you were going to post this V123 or Voices or Voicebank, I would probably cut this down to 15 secs. Re-read and pick up the pace, tighten up the production, drop some cliches. The production quality is good, The mix is good.

    You have a tendency to hold onto words. That works with some deliveries and specific content geared to a more dramatic effect. This is dry content and needs to be delivered in a more tongue in cheek kinda way. Think Dennis Leary. His deliveries are quick, succinct pieces of information with a "meh" type of attitude.

    I didn't get that from this one.

    It seems you really like to do production work and you have an ear for it. As I mentioned I would carve this one down, and post 2 or 3 more commercials in different styles. I wouldn't remember this one to ask my friends if they've seen it. know what I mean.

    I know you like to help a lot of folk out here and you give a lot of your time doing it. If you want to send me the stems for this I'll show you what I mean. Your free to use it, au gratis. danny@totalmixandmaster.com

    Good luck
    Danny

    Peer Feedback:

    great spot. nice production job (mix it yourself?)
    the moan was a bit racy at the end, but it is Durex commercial. I think a naughty giggle would work too.

    awesome work.
    DS

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    Gamestop Trade-in Promo

    Script:

    Beat all your games? Keep it fresh and get up to 40% extra trade credit when you trade toward Dragonball Fighters, Monster Hunter: World or Shadow of the Colossus. Gamestop. Buy. Sell. Trade. Repeat. Rated T through M.

    63 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-144169/script-recording-103914.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Den. Couldn't really hear the very first word BEAT. Also, choose important words and enhance them a bit, especially the NAME of the sompany GAMESTOP. Also, cop a knowing attitude. Like, "I understand how you feel... I am not challenged by my games anymore either." And then hit it from there. Nice job!

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    Gamestop

    Script:

    Whether it's scoring the winning goal, dominating your enemies, or single handedly saving the world, there's only one place that has it all. Gamestop has all the latest titles, including Destiny Two, NBA 2K18, and Marvel vs. Capcom Infinite. In fact, get 50 dollars in store credit when you trade in any PS4, Xbox One, or Nintendo Switch with a PowerUp Rewards membership. Gamestop, power to the players.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sterling Cage's recording

    Wanting to know how the overall recording quality sounds (is it too loud/quiet, is there background noise?). Suggestions for how to improve delivery are also encouraged!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123731/script-recording-98824.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording level - seemed a bit low compared to others in the forum, but didn't import into my DAW to check levels.

    I thought the first sentence started off a little professionally weak, but then you got going on the rest of the read. I appreciate when a voice talent can do an "exciting" "urgent" kind of promo read - I couldn't to save my life.

    be more careful with product names - you kind of mushed over "NBA 2k-eighteen", "Marvel vs. Capcom Infinite". Also "PowerUp" would probably need a 2nd take.

    hope that's helpful,
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Maybe more energy through the read.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear keith.nelson's recording

    Hello Dan, A couple days ago you critiqued one of my recordings. I took your advice and wanted your feedback. Others suggested to speak as though I was talking to someone across the table, something I continually forget. To clarify your statements, yes I built a sound room in a closet with acoustical foam. I also realized the Base Cut Filter was switched on, on my Perception 220 mic. Please, let me know if it sounds better. Thank you again for your guidance.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-69455/script-recording-89773.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds better than the first one.
    I got off on a tangent after listening to your two versions and a bunch of others on the contest page--the pronunciation of "mayonnaise." I had no idea there was such a wide range in the States. You're right about in the middle it seems with "mayennaise," a very slight pronunciation of the "yo," but many on the contest site were saying "manaise." ?? Then I found this: http://www.thejournal.ie/maps-americans-pronounce-different-words-938575...
    Mayonnaise is about the 8th one down. With a geographical spread like that, I'd be curious to know how the industry would want it. I'm more in the "mayuhnnaise" camp, but that might be a Canadian thing.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Keith,

    Thank you again for choosing me to do your checkup. The sound quality and edits are much cleaner and something that any engineer should be able to work with. GOOD JOB! You have a very quirky tonal quality that is very specific. This delivery is slow and stiff. It is reminiscent of Tom Bodet ("We'll leave the light on for you") with a higher tonal pitch. You simply don't sound confident or as though you are trying to communicate a message. You're just saying the words. Ongoing coaching can resolve this. Please let us know how we can help you move forward. Thanks again and have a GREAT day!

    Dan

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach May 20, 2016 at 9:52AM

    Peer Feedback:

    This is a short little script and, as such, doesn't have quite as much time to have a variety of style built into it. I have to say, though, your "And, oh, how!" treatment sounds much like the rest while, unlike the rest, it's not listing off a number of other things. That more than anything else makes it sound more like a read than an expression of interest about something which you're sharing with (yes) someone across the table. I am very new to this game, but your sound quality sounds good to me, as does most of your delivery, but it just doesn't feel as natural as it could.

    Peer Feedback:

    Read the comments from the Contest judge. And listen to people deliver limericks on YouTube. There's a definite rhythmic pattern (scan) and style to it. They're usually quite comical, which is why the initial direction was to "have fun with it."

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    Gillette

    Script:

    This is what men do to try to get every hair. This is what we do. Introducing Fusion ProGlide,
    rebuilt with flexball technology. Makes maximum contact over tricky contours and gets virtually every hair. New flexball for the Fusion ProGlide. Gillette, the best a man can get.

    86 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear c.r.underhill's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really great job overall. Timing was good, emotion behind the words was solid, diction was good... no improvements that I can hear. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked it. And wanna add to it. I think the first sentence should be less question-sounding and more bottom-line sounding. I'd love to hear that and compare the two

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    Goodyear Tires

    Script:

    Does peace of mind have a name? Can confidence and trust be summed up in one word? Can innovation really mean security? In 90 manufacturing centers in 27 countries, Goodyear scientists and engineers are working every day to answer those questions. And to ensure that your family is riding on the safest, most durable tires we can make. Peace of mind does have a name – it’s Goodyear.

    20 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I did this one last night before I searched YouTube for Goodyear commercials and found the long one.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Goodyear2-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sweet.

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    GoPro Hero Five Black

    Script:

    How would you like to relive your wildest adventures? Well, now you can with the GoPro Hero 5 Black. With a two-inch touch display, advanced video stabilization, and 4K quality video. All in a waterproof body... now that’s wild.

    69 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Sterling Cage's recording

    Looking for any constructive feedback, with an emphasis on performance, and what I can work on from a technical aspect. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-123731/script-recording-100192.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your enthusiasm. Makes me interested in knowing more.

    It didn't sound like you pronounced the world "wild" fully. I only heard "wil", no "d"

    By the way, I think your voice sounds similar to that of actor, Jerry Houser, who has done a number of voice overs in addition to acting in front of the camera..

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    Hardware Plus

    Script:

    I just discovered the most amazing store on the Post Road in Stratford. It’s called Hardware Plus. This is no ordinary hardware store. Hardware Plus is an honest-to-goodness factory outlet. So, not only are the prices and selection incredible, but the people who work there really know hardware. I never get that kind of know-how and service at those warehouse-type home centers or so-called “clubs”. It’s even easy to get to -- right off Exit 59 of the Connecticut Turnpike. HARDWARE PLUS -- You’ll see the difference.

    29 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear waninick's recording

    First post. I know that the sound quality is not what I am after yet, but just want a feel for the read. I had been working for 2+ hours when this was recorded, so a couple of places are a bit raspy, at least to my ear. Thanks in advance for your feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13337/script-recording-71843.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    How's it going man? Well I am no professional at this either, but my best critique I can give on this read, is you did a great job in some places, but in other places I felt like the emotion was conveyed wrong. I felt drawn in by some parts of your read, others I couldn't connect with as well. But I am sure that comes from 2 hours of practice, ha ha I know that's what is does for me. Other than that, great voice, no noticeable breathing points, and all around decent read.

    If you have the time, please review my read from a few days ago titled "Advantage Technology". :)

    God Bless brother,

    TJS

    Peer Feedback:

    When you say that you'd been working for 2+ hours when you recorded this, does that mean that you were working on this piece alone or other things as well?

    The reason I ask is that there is a "danger" to over practice and over think a piece of copy. Analyzing it, however, is something else altogether.

    First of all, what type of a commercial is it? My guess is - radio. It's wordy and contains a lot of elements (where, what, comparisons, etc.) and lots of information. And, without visual support, the whole picture has to be painted with the voice.

    Second question (or third, if you're keeping score) - Who are you talking to?
    Fourth question - How excited are you about this, or to what degree of immediacy do you think this story needs to be told? If this is, as I suspect, a radio spot, this read is too slow. This would probably be a 30 second spot and you came in at a little under 36 seconds. That's not to say to speed through the copy, but find the places where to slow the delivery (store name, address, how to get there) and when to speed it up (pretty much the whole middle section - after the first mention of the store through to where you mention its location).

    Another question (now I've lost track) - What's really important here and what's not? The name of the store is obvious - but the first time you said it, it was almost tossed away (said quickly and with a downward inflection). Is "Soooo" that important? Or is it just a toss-away? (It sounded a little contrived to me. People do talk that way, but do you really think, with so much more important information to impart - the store name, where it's located, how to get there, the friendly people, etc. - that you can take so much time on such an unimportant word?)

    The whole thing is a little sell-y to me. I felt impersonally talked AT rather than talked TO as a friend. The thing that counteracts this, is that your voice is very inviting and easy to listen to - in timber and dynamic range.

    The voice - the brightness, up-ness and friendly sound - is perfect for a spot like this. The recording quality also sounds fine. What is lacking is a personal connection - it sounds too "studied". You hit all the marks, but I can hear the effort to do so. Personalize it. Tell this tale to me as a friend with a great big secret and with a great big smile. Kid in the candy store kind of thing.

    Peer Feedback:

    James,
    Thanks so much for the detailed response. I absolutely understand your points and very much appreciate your reminding me of all the things Coach Kristen told me and worked with me on several weeks ago. Your last paragraph made me go back and check who wrote it...!! It's exactly what she would have said.
    Sooooo :), I am going to re-do this one and post a second take soon. Lots of stuff to work on. As for the 2 hours, no, it was not all on this one. This is actually probably the 3rd take. And I was not keeping track of the time, something I will do next time. My days in radio have long past, and my internal clock seems to be offline...! Your point about practice is quite valid, and my biggest problem right now is finding time to do that. When I finally do get time, it is usually a single long block, and I try to make the most of it. So I go over a lot of script. But I don't spend a lot of time on any one piece. But I will be spending 'better' time on them in the future. Again, thanks so much for your feedback.

    Peer Feedback:

    Pretty much agree with James' assessment and his thorough nit-pick. One I'll add is that you ran 7 seconds over. Editing down the spaces between sentences on a radio spot is defacto editing. Also, kill the breaths. But it should fit a 30 second slot. I've done it...it's not hard. Good luck.

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    Home Depot

    Script:

    Home Depot
    You spend so much time and attention designing the inside of your home, why stop at the back door with your deck?
    Become an exterior decorator with the Timber Tech Azek Harvest Collection at the Home Depot.
    Take your great taste outside with the beautiful and durably designed premium capped composite deck made to look like natural wood.
    Stretch your imagination to a deck that says you not afraid to go against the grain.
    The Timber Tech Azek Harvest Collection. Now at the Home Depot

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear bburrell's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoy your common man approach like a neighbor talking.
    In my humble opinion try a slight more serious approach and highlite terminals. Nice work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Your style was good, but for an advertising you might consider adding a bit more character in the "Timber Tech Azek Harvest Collection" - just a thought.

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    Home Depot

    Script:

    The Home Depot is more than a store. Whether it’s supplies, tools, or just a little advice. We’ve got you covered. So stop procrastinating. Come to The Home Depot and start checking off some of those items on that “to do” list. The Home Depot. You can do it. We can help.

    72 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shreevidz's recording

    Looking for feedback on delivery and sound quality.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-145034/script-recording-105497.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Love your voice. I could imagine myself listening to this ad and being encouraged to check off that list. This made me FEEL! A -P- popped on "We can help".

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read! Delivery is spot on. The sound every now and then felt a little "boxy" try using equalizers to help reduce that sound. Other than that fantastic

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Touzet,

    I thought that you did a fantastic job! That was a lot to squeeze and say in 15 seconds! I loved your music and special effects too!! Keep the great work up!

    Many Blessings,
    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello: I think I am off to buy a Cadillac! Really great and the background really added to it as well.

    Chrissy45

    Peer Feedback:

    That was a brilliant performance ! Sound quality crisp and clean !

    Peer Feedback:

    great high-energy promo...I like your delivery in this high-pitched, fast paced piece.
    well done,
    Dave S.

    PS: one parting thought: I think the music started out great, but really needs an ending, not just a fade out -- an exclamation point. (especially since it's a finished :15)
    ever play around with mashing beginnings with ending (usually with a nice long cross-fade)?
    this spot might be worth the effort to revisit.
    otherwise, and I was just nit-picking, this is really nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for the comments. Dave, Very often I do slice up the track to have a real ending...just cutting corners here a bit ;-) I just went and checked out the real end of the track I used and it only had kind of a lame fade. So, I'd have had to switch the track to something else.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good energy in the read. The opening " get ta" instead of "Get to" needs to be more articulate. There was some clipping in the sound on "month" (12 secs). The editing was good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good comments Daniel, I think you're right on both counts. I pulled this audio from a :15 sec video I had attached it to, and the video editing software doesn't really give too good a look at the waveform. The clipping is audible though.I believe I did hear a bit of a crunch but just left it. I would have pulled the track from the audio software but I added the foley noises in the video editor and wanted to keep them. The to / tuh thing : It definitely could have been more of a TOOH but at the speed this thing is going, you could sound over enunciated pretty quickly. Excellent comments though. Thank you.

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    Honda Insight

    Script:

    The Honda Insight, an innovative battery, split fold-down rear seats, and 43 hwy mpg. The hybrid designed and priced for us all. The new Insight. From Honda. For everyone.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EvanderBakerVO's recording

    Hey! I'm looking for feedback on a more casual, conversational read after a coaching session focusing on it. Any tips would be great. Thanks kindly!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love the timber of your voice. Very natural sounding and smooth! Good pace too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great tone and attitude for this type of copy. I can offer a couple tweaks that will make a difference. Maybe about half as much of a pause between "Honda Insight" and the next sentence. And secondly, make sure your words contain all the letters, example "priced for us all" almost comes across as "price force all". In other words be sure to emphasize that last "d"" in priced" and a less running together of "for us". Those are key words partly because it's the last sentence you leave the listener with. All your previous lines build up this great smooth, trustworthy confidence, so let that last line be super clear but still have that "you-ness" of you!. Good stuff.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you should annunciate a bit more on your words but it sounds good!

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    Honda

    Script:

    What is Honda?

    For him…it’s better roads.
    For them…better schools.
    It helps her put food on the table.
    And helps to keep her kids safe.
    It’s savings for the things they want, and resources for the things they need.
    It’s better jobs, steady jobs.
    At Honda…we’re proud to be part of the fabric…the lifeblood of all these things.
    Because together…we’re not just building cars…
    …we’re helping to build a community…right here at home.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Barbara Nygaard's recording

    I would also like feedback on the audio quality.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Silky smooth delivery!
    Very clear, very believable.

    The recording quality seemed excellent to me.

    Lukky Salas

    Peer Feedback:

    Waveform analysis:

    Minimum sample value -0.7654 -0.7499
    Maximum sample value 1.0019 0.9933
    Peak amplitude 0.0 dB -0.1 dB
    DC offset 0.0000 0.0000
    Minimum RMS power -79.7 dB -79.5 dB
    Average RMS power -18.1 dB -18.3 dB
    Maximum RMS power -12.7 dB -12.8 dB
    Clipped samples 1 0

    The peak amplitude should be normalized or set to -3db. Here's it's at 0db. That's twice as 'hot' as it should be. Every 3db basically doubles the volume as a rule. So....one thing is it's too loud. You clipped or distorted the sound once on the left channel...also happens when you hit 0db.

    Your mic technique might need addressing. I'm hearing a lot of mouth noise without a lot of clicks and pops created by bad hydration, but from proximity. It sounds like you're too close.

    For a corporate public relations type delivery, you'll want to sound more chipper than here. This almost sounds sad in tone. While it might seem reassuring by being 'caring,' it's not the right tone for this script. Give it some smile ...a happier sound and your smooth voice would work nicely for a spot like this. Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Beautiful voice, but, as indicated above, a little too earnest and slow.

    Peer Feedback:

    Are you using a pop screen? Lots of popped p's, b's and t's. If you're not using one, you might try to record off-axis to the mic. That way you won't be pushing the air from your mouth directly into the mic, but past it, helping to cut down on the plosive sound.

    It reminds me of those BASF commercials. "We dont make the this thing, we make this thing thingier." Same kind of quality and intention. If you're going to go for the sexy, soothing, knowing with a smile kind of read (which could be perfectly valid here with the proper music supporting it), you'll need to pick your "yummy" words and tighten it up a bit. Your slate (which you probably don't need to do on this forum since your name accompanies your recording) only took 1 second, and you still came in at about :33. On the other hand, if this is a corporate video with no real time limit, then the ideas and complete phrases probably need a slight pause between them such that an editor has the space to sinc it up.

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    Hoover Steam Cleaner

    Script:

    We’re rolling out the ultimate deep cleaning machine with seven rotating brushes. Only Ultra gives you a five-brush rotating head technology and separate powered hand tool with two more brushes for stairs and upholstery. Nobody else has anything like it. Hoover SteamVac Ultra with powered hand tool. No family should be without one.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Geoffrey Ivan's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi, Geoffrey. This copy seems like a better match for your voice than the Calloway Golf spot. Your phrasing is excellent. Connected and inflected really well. Note here how you end the phrase "for stairs and upholstery" is better, in my opinion, than the gold club performance. Small thing but you are ready to compete and small things matter. I'd suggest you try playing with your pacing. It's very steady and a touch slow, perhaps. I think this audition is terrific. Bill Anciaux

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear S. Hecht's recording

    Just looking for general feedback

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    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds clean, clear and professional, very enthusiastic. I like your emphasis on the name of the company promoting the rewards program. Consider a slightly slower pace on the final "horsecareloyalty.com" so the website sticks with the listener.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very pleasant voice! I agree with sallybvo on slowing the pace with the website name. Overall, great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Professional sounding read! Clear, too! Pacing is good. The audio quality is also great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Friendly voice, professional, and the quality of the recording and the read is wonderful. Great job!

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    Howard Miller Clock

    Script:

    Howard Miller Clock
    Important moments should be remembered always. The gift of a finely crafted Howard Miller clock will bring back the memories again and again. Share the moment...with a Howard Miller clock.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Ken Unis's recording

    I have a home made mini VO box i made and i threw a blanket over me to stop any echoing. What do you think of the quality and the read. Thank you

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    Peer Feedback:

    Couple of observations:
    Sounded more like you were "reading" rather than doing a narration.
    You said "memories" in place of that word "moments."
    Noticeable mouth popping noises.
    LOTS of room reverberations. You'll be needing some kind of sound shielding.
    Hope that helps.
    Mike W.

    Peer Feedback:

    Can`t believe i sent the wrong take. Sorry

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    Indianapolis Indians

    Script:

    Indianapolis Indians
    He doesn't have a long white beard, but Rowdie Claus, the Tribes merry mascot, will have plenty of holiday spirit to go around.
    Kids will have the chance to get a picture taken with Rowdie in his holiday attire on Saturday, December 17.
    Bring the kids and lots of holiday cheer and we'll see you there!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ervin208's recording

    Thanks for your feedback! I especially would like your thoughts on my copy interpretation and technique. I am working on my post recording editing. Does it sound like a finished product?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-119268/script-recording-97287.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your energy was great in that you were trying to get people to want to come see Rowdie! You have a pleasant voice. Areas to watch: mouth noise. I could hear some pops and clicks. It felt a little rushed at the beginning. A slight pause after "Claus" and before "...will have" would have helped; in other words make "the Tribes merry mascot" an aside comment. Try to vary pace and inflection.The first sentence was pretty much the same level and pace.You want to try and create tension and mystery at the start so that the punch line, the last sentence, makes them want to act. Recording quality was good; didn't hear any background noise.

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    Jared

    Script:

    At Jared we turn feelings into jewelry. Jewelry that tells her she’s the best thing that’s ever happened to you, In a way that goes beyond words. It could be a piece jewelry designers created just for Jared, or a piece we custom made just for you. Because we’re more than a store that sells beautiful jewelry. We are jewelers. The one unique gift that tells her exactly how you feel. That’s why he went to Jared.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MRodenhizer's recording

    I am currently use a Blue Yeti for the first time and I would like to know how it sounds.

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    Peer Feedback:

    hey -- I don't know the mic, but it sounds like you're a little far away? I'd like a little more presense in the sound. I thought the read was good! I thought you nailed "the one unique gift" line. I felt like I wanted a little more sentiment in some places, namely the first and last lines.

    Nice read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Agreed with Polar re a little more sentiment, especially in the "in a way that goes beyond words" line. I also struggle with 'trailing off' at the end of sentences, so I picked up on that in some of your lines.

    Guessing you're a little far away from the mic because there is a quietness and lack of fidelity, maybe, to the sound? The Yeti also has a number of pattern settings, maybe you're on the wrong one. The Blue series of USB mics are very controversial in the industry. But it is possible to make them sound good enough for a lot of gigs.

    Peer Feedback:

    I use a Blue Yeti for my 'travel' mic and get great recordings from it if I treat the recording area correctly. Here's a couple of tips. For VO, I've found the the Yeti sounds great when your mouth is about 8-10 inches from the mic, off axis so you don't get plosives on your recording. Make sure it's on cardiod setting, and make sure you are talking into the FRONT of the mic, not behind. Record at decent levels (-12 to -6 db) , and then 'Normalize' to -3db and you'd be on your way to a much, much better sound. Then we can hear what you sound like. Cheers!

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    Jigsaw Puzzles

    Script:

    Jigsaw puzzles! Loads of different puzzles and accessories for all ages! Find jigsaw puzzles for any skill level from 24 to 32,000 pieces! Regardless of what your likes are, there is a jigsaw puzzle to suit you. From mini jigsaw puzzles to 3D jigsaw puzzles to giant jigsaw puzzles, you’ll find an abundance of awesome puzzles to choose from.

    54 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EvanderBakerVO's recording

    Hello! I'm trying to vary my pitch as a technique for reads while trying to sound authentic and natural, and I will continue to improve. But please let me know what you think in the meantime (as well as any other thoughts you're willing to share.) Thanks all ^^

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    Peer Feedback:

    Lots of energy, which sounds right for this read.
    a few plosives on "puzzles" - step back from the mic a bit, or use a pop filter.

    nice job,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Great energy and pacing - fits the script really well!

    A few words could be pronounced more clearly: "for" sounds like "fur," "mini" sounds a bit like "many" with a southern drawl, and a little stronger "d" sound when you say "find."

    Good job!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Sorry, friends, I clicked on the wrong damned audio file, and uploaded an "ersatz" and unmastered "Character Demo" by mistake. Sorry. Attached here is my actual "Commercial Demo." Loooove that technology, right? Thanks for understanding - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-37128.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim,

    Haven't heard from you for awhile, as I've also been on a hiatus; but I enjoyed the demo very much as you were very versatile in each read which is an asset. Great job!

    All the best,
    Lenny (lcw115)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Hey, Dear Colleagues - I just completed this. You guys have all been sounding pretty awesome lately! Congrats! Thanks - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-37126.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Jim I'm new to this but holy cow that is awesome. I'm assuming this is your professional demo? It sounded incredible. You have such a great "gravelly" voice...
    Andrew

    Peer Feedback:

    Ditto what Geldy7 said. Very nice quality and very marketable. Best of luck to you!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the kind words, Guys.

    Unfortunately, during the posting process, I clicked on the wrong file and uploaded what is basically an informal character demo, which you both heard. My actual "commercial demo" is second post, directly above this one, and I'd love to receive your feedback on that as well.

    Thanks, again - Jim

    Peer Feedback:

    Cancel the above! Apparently wiser heads at the Edge Studio noticed the problem and tweaked my submissions appropriately. Now I REALLY feel like an idiot!

    Thanks, again, for the kind words.

    Jim

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    joy

    Script:

    just a spoonful of ultra joy dish liquid & antibacterial hand soap cleans a sinkful of dishes, that's because joy last so long, in fact, you'd need twice as much of your old liquid to soak through the toughest grease. Plus, it kills germs on hands, That's one powerful little spoonful, and that's the real joy. joy.. the little spoonful that does a sinkful.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear stephsvoice's recording

    as i was editing this i realized how i could have done better with the script, BUT i am wondering how is my editing going and recording sounding? Also, I am from Alabama but i cant hear if i have some regionalism going on. thanks in advance

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    Peer Feedback:

    i think the editing is awesome i really liked it and the quality you have a great voice but you could have done better with the script as you said

    Peer Feedback:

    thank youuuu

    Peer Feedback:

    you'r welcome

    Peer Feedback:

    Your accent is really noticeable, but I think it works! That said, I'd still work on developing a neutral accent anyway. Being able to do it will open you up to a lot more work.

    I really like your use of emphasis and pauses.

    Watch that you don't end your sentences on an upward intonation, like on the word 'spoonful' at the end of the script. It makes it sound as if you're unsure as to what you're talking about.

    Also, on the tagline, I'd slow it down a bit. It's gotta be memorable. If it were me, I'd read it like "The little spoonful (beat) that does a sinkfull".

    Only other thing I'd say is maybe try slowing down a bit. It depends on the commercial, but if you can get used to slowing down and really savoring the words, it's a lot easier to go faster. For example, if someone was to go into a recording session talking at a mile a minute, and the director wanted it even faster, you've got nowhere to go. If you go in slower, then you've got some wiggle room.

    Recording quality seemed fine. You're clear and easy to understand. If you can, see if you're able to edit out some of the mouth noise you've got going on throughout the piece. It's not all that noticeable, but it's still there, and you don't want to give a casting director any reason to not think you're perfect.

    Nice work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi!
    I really liked this read! I think it matched the tone the script was looking for. Don't be too hard on yourself! Also I think your accent brought a nice down to earth quality to it!

    Thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank y’all so much! So very healthful!

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    Kingsford

    Script:

    Barbecues are corn on the cob, elbows on the table, and fire flies in a mason jar. And, there’s just one thing we want to change about yours. Improved Kingsford Charcoal. It cooks twice as fast as other charcoals and burns even longer. New Kingsford. It’s the only thing we’d change about your barbecue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Michael Hughes's recording

    Still working with my new set up. Thanks all!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You had a smile in your voice for this read that made me smile in return. I liked your recording quality as well. I think you pitched your voice a little high, though. Doing that made you sound just a little bit tense. Starting on a little lower pitch might have given you room to go up a little toward that nice ending.

    Peer Feedback:

    Michael -
    nice read. I think your voice sounds very "guy next door" which is a perfect fit for this script.
    the only thing that caught my ear was the tagline - "New Kingsford. It's thu only thing..."
    you seemed to go flat on the "the". it seems a bit out of place.

    otherwise, nice job.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Spot on Dave. I didn't hear it before. Il have to learn from that one.

    Peer Feedback:

    It was a bit high at the onset. Thanks Chris.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Michael,
    I agree that your voice fits the script. One unmentioned point: on my headphones at least, many of your consonants are rather plosive-y-- for example, I can hear 3 thuds in a row at "one" "thing" and "change", among others. Maybe tilting the mic to a slight angle would remedy that issue.
    Best,
    Peter

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the idea Peter. I will adjust the beauty tonight.

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    Kodak - Advantix

    Script:

    The ultra slim, ultra light ADVANTIX from KODAK. There's no place it won't fit in.

    48 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    The sound is very clear - recording sounds professional to me. Voice sounds good perhaps a bit slow paced? Again vey professional - clean voice!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear endives's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi endives,
    I like the enthusiasm in your delivery.
    You have emphasized all words equally.
    It will sound better if you choose some words that you wish to emphasize.
    Some words you could emphasize:

    Kohl's
    wardrobe
    0-40%
    sportswear
    40% off
    wardrobe items
    50% off
    all shoes

    Regards
    Jothi

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - there was no inflection in your voice, you just read the copy. I would hit the word Kohl's. Your emotional tone did not stimulate me to want to spend my money. Your high pitch and tempo created too much excitement for me as a shopper. good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Where's the fire ;)

    The tempo was so fast the listener won't have to time to absorbe what you said before moving on the next item. Give it a couple of beat to soak in. IT's more like you're trying to get through words than tell people about this great sale you know about.

    Put yourself in the shoes of the listener. How would you respond if someone came up to you & started going rapid fire like that?

    Also, don't downplay the work Kohl's. The client gets a bit irritated when you do that.

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    Kroger - :30

    Script:

    If you’re looking for smart ways to stretch your budget, head to your neighborhood Kroger for the BIG 4-Day Sale! It’s happening now through Monday. Just bring your Plus Card and you can take home HOT deals…like delicious Pork Back Ribs. They’re Buy 1 Get, 1 FREE. And Lay’s or Doritos Party Size Chips are just 2-88 at the 4-Day Sale. Visit Kroger-dot-com or the app for details, and find all the family favorites you can save on! Fresh food. Low prices. At Kroger.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kelly Coker's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm shopping at Kroger! Well done. Just one word I listened to several times to understand. They're. It was a little "muted"? Enunciation?

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    L.L. Bean

    Script:

    How tough is it? We're talking back of the bus tough. Now our best-selling Deluxe Book Pack has comfier shoulder straps, zipper covers and more. The best news? We didn't change the price.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    If it were my recording, I'd push the emotion a bit more. This backpack is back of the freaking bus tough, which means it could probably deflect a bullet. If it were me, I'd get that idea to show in my read.

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    Lasik

    Script:

    Narrator: People used to ask me,

    Person: Why do you always squint?

    Narrator: But thanks to Lasik Eye Center, now they say:

    Person: (silence)

    Narrator: Ahhhh... hear that? They don't say anything, because I don't squint anymore!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Bhart0206's recording

    Newbie. Trying to practice the whole are of "conversational" when performing. Your feedback is appreciated!!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation good.
    Vocal.....could be a little more conversational. Last line I think is best.
    Quality: I hear some background hum and mic seems a little muffled.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice! I like your tone and energy on this script. I don't think you need to exaggerate the voice on the "person" line so much. In fact, you can probably keep the same voice as if you are having a friendly conversation with a friend and telling them what people used to ask you. Also, personally, I think the "ahhhh..." part of the last line is meant to be more of an "Aha!" moment in terms of subtext as opposed to a moment of relaxation which is how it's currently coming across in your interpretation.

    Peer Feedback:

    HI...
    Copy interpretation: good.
    Vocal performance: good...however I would give a beat before coming in with the Ahhhh.... Also...there is a lot of background noise...keep an eye out on your Noise floor.... be careful with your plosive there were a lot in your read. I am uber sensitive because I have a problem in my reads with plosives....
    Good Job.
    Lenny

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    Lazyboy

    Script:

    So sexy, it’ll make you want to cheat on your sofa. The Camilla Chaise. Lazyboy, the new look of comfort.

    44 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'd think about what you're trying to say. The commercial is pushing the chair as being sexy, right? If it were me doing the read, I'd go for a more sensuous tone. Really draw out the words and make every single one of them about as sugar coated as I can. I mean, they're talking about cheating on your sofa, so it'd better be a damn sexy chair.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Did this script back in March, however it was deleted (not by me) therefore I am re-recording it. Used a sultry tone and a bit of humor for script. Please comment on performance and would appreciate constructive, courteous, and positive feedback. Thank you.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-7256/script-recording-31057.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this is just about perfect! I cannot put my finger on a single true problem with this read, or its production.

    Drat.

    :D

    Regards,

    SteveO

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Steve! I really appreciate your comment!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lcw115's recording

    Trying to deliver scripts with different tones and emotions. Used sultry tone for first line, then a little humor, and let it flow. Apologize for sound quality, however only want comments on performance. Would appreciate constructive, courteous, and positive feedback. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it was pretty good! I could identify what you were doing with each segment and (the crappy speakers I have here) it sounded ok. I'll listen and comment later in more depth

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Nodo!

    Any advice will be helpful. Sound quality was not the best as I realize, it is an internal problem with the mini-laptop's mic. As when I record not only on Audacity, but with Windows Sound Recorder, the same phazing and screeching noise is appearing. Therefore certain words don't sound clear in recordings.

    Will correct issue.

    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think this is excellent. You not only went from sultry to humour to delivery but they blend together and give great direction to the read.
    Also your ending consonants in the beginning remain in character, which is really great.

    Great read, and the music is a good choice too!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much!

    I wanted to add a little humor for a change pace and used the jazz music bed for the sultry sound.

    Take Care, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Why haven't you got a USB microphone? You seem so frustrated with the mic problem.
    Concentrate on your delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Henry,

    I explained the problems I had with the microphone I received as a gift from a friend, which produced a lot of static whereas I could not use it. Therefore I will have to get another one, but I want to purchase something of good quality for my recordings and the majority of professional sounding microphones are between $100.00 and up.

    At the moment, I cannot do that because I have other obligations as I have to purchase art supplies on a monthly or bi-monthly basis as I'm an Abstract Artist and with certain display opportunities; fees are required to showcase your work. Also there are other things I'm pursuing that requires finances and I live in a very expensive city in which I have to support my livelihood.

    I will get something just for practice purpose and in regards to concentrating on my deliveries; I'm doing the best of my ability.

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    LCW, Great job. I really liked this one very much. Excellent tone for the sultry part and you stepped into a friendlier tone from there. Very effective. You've said a lot about the lack of a fancy microphone, but that is not slowing you down in terms of your performance. I ignore the audio quality knowing you are using what is available and concentrate on how I hear you coming across. David

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi David,

    I'm beginning to feel more comfortable with the reads and trying to use as much emotion and tone to make them sound good.

    Glad you enjoyed it and thank you for your comment, I appreciate it!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    So, don't apologize for your microphone! Go with your strength, your voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'll try my best.

    Thank you Henry, I appreciate it!

    Take Care,
    LCW.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-75374.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Touzet. I would have liked a slight pause after Lee as the words ran into each other and sounded like 'Leknows'. The beginning of your next line wasn't clearlty enunciated 'Where/Wear? to get noticed' misplaced inflection on 'to' instead of 'noticed'. The rest was Ok along with your tone. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for taking the time ArlenChitty. Hard to find space for pauses in a :15. I think the original one of these actually ran Lee-knows together more than I did... chuckle. Might be able to use pitch as well to get some separation there. Good observations though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Touzet,
    I didn't think there was any problem with needing a pause after Lee..it sounded clear to me. Great tone for this piece and rapid pace - wow - 15sec! Clear sound and nice music addition as well! Super job!
    ~Laura

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    Legos

    Script:

    My child has quite an imagination. His teachers say that some day he'll be doing great things. Right now, he's already an architect, a designer, an engineer ... I think he's a creative genius ... and thanks to Legos, the creative building toy, there's just no limit to what he can do, LEGOS ... the creative diversion that helps develop a child's potential.

    66 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LS77's recording

    Doing these practices are really pushing up my home studio set-up timetable. I'm hearing every otherwise avoidable pop and bump. I'm only seeking feedback on the read.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-149992/script-recording-106665.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Your interpretation is good. I would work on making it a little less sell sounding.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi LS77, I like the inflection in your voice during your read. I would try to make it a bit more conversational and slow it down a little bit at the end.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree that you should slow down a little and you can tell you are selling something make it sound a little more like bragging about your son to somebody

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    Llawn Table - script contest submission date 5-17-2016

    Script:

    Get a Llawn table now for the holidays. For your ketchup, your mustard and mayonnaise. If you come in right now, you’ll save, and oh, how! At CompTent Furniture you’ll save in so many ways.

    77 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear keith.nelson's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-69455/script-recording-89717.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You're reading the script. You need to interpret it to make it sound like you are talking to someone across the table from you. Not into a microphone in a sing song manner. You have to be a VOICE ACTOR. Make it believable.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Keith,

    Thank you for choosing me to do your checkup. Either you've done a fantastic job editing out background noise or your environment is very quiet. Great job with that. The microphone is a bit hollow sounding and is poor sounding in the high end. It lacks crispness and clarity. It is something that can be EQ'd somewhat in post at the moment, but when you become a better performer, you can look into purchasing a better quality microphone. As for your performance ... you have a long way to go. Currently, you are just playing with words and aren't really communicating. Coaching can help this. You do have a unique quality to your voice and I do believe it is a marketable sound in several areas of VO work. I hope this helps. Have a GREAT day!

    Dan Friedman

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach May 18, 2016 at 10:16AM

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with Buddy Bortz.

    But there's something else you missed (sort of). This copy is written as rhyming doublets It's actually a limerick. You kind of got the feel, but it was too drawn out. How would you have read it if it looked like this:
    _____________

    Get a Llawn table now for the holidays.
    For your ketchup, your mustard and mayonnaise.

    If you come in right now,
    You’ll save, and oh, how!

    At CompTent Furniture you’ll save in so many ways.
    ______________

    Ya kinda have ta fudge with the last line to make it scan well as a limerick. You kinda have ta hit "Funiture" and plow past "CompTent", but the listener should pick it up.

    Addendum:

    I didn't look ahead of time, but something in the back of my brain told me that this might be a Contest script. I checked, and indeed it is.

    The Contest is just that - a contest, a mock audition. Asking for peer critique to potentially change and replace your contest submission may give you an unfair advantage over the other participants.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for your input. James you're right it would be unfair, however, I submitted late on Tuesday with no time to resubmit, so no worries. I appreciate the input. I was taken back by the script, but if I continue to remember to read as though someone is across the table I think I'll be in a much better place. I just rerecorded and submited for pro-advice allowing peer reviews as well so any input would be appreciated. Thanks again.

    Peer Feedback:

    you have an original voice no DOUBT !!!!!
    everyone needs work but i can hear you in the movies easily
    stick with it bud !

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    25 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear endives's recording

    I'm a beginner really trying to gain polish so any advice from those of you who are working in retail VO would be so appreciated!! Thanks p.s. I know some ads are really bubbly, some not as much. I went with more towards "not as much."

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8746/script-recording-26228.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It was a good read, pacing and inflection were both good and it was bubbly..but it was appropriate for the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your energy. It was upbeat and enthusiastic - appropriate for this type of spot. Although you didn't ask for feedback on the audio quality, there was quite an echo.
    Otherwise, nice read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like. The first edit between sale & Storewide felt a bit unnatural & chopped.

    Your excitement peaked on the 25-50%. Try escalating all 3 percentages. Getting 60% off is the most exciting.

    Watch your timing & pace. If this is supposed to be a :30 you're :12 short.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very good script for you Endives. As the ad required an energetic voice which you have. Continue practicing and go for scripts that are upbeat for your personality. Best of luck.

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    Macy's

    Script:

    It’s Macy’s Thanksgiving sale. Storewide savings for the whole family. All women’s coats and jackets...30-50 percent off. All men’s outerwear...25-50 percent off. And all kids’ jackets, hats, and gloves...up to 60 percent off. Macy’s Thanksgiving Sale. All you need for the holidays.

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear rebeccakwoods's recording

    Newbie to site. Seeking feedback. Thank much!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-17968/script-recording-39864.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Rebecca,

    The delivery wasn't bad, however it needs to sound more natural and conversational. Because right now it sounds more like a read rather than a commercial. However, you do have a nice tone to your voice and I would just practice as much as you can using the right emotion, pace, pitch within the deliveries. Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    All the best,
    Lenny

    Peer Feedback:

    Copy interpretation: perfect.
    Sounded like a reverb or an echo in the background.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good start...keep practicing and trying. The more relaxed you are, the better it will sound.

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    McDonald's World Taste Tour

    Script:

    Introducing the World Taste Tour at McDonalds
    Use the My McD’s app for a chance to win a trip to China, Italy or Australia!
    Visit mcdonalds.com for full contest details and win today!

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Greg Allen's recording

    Hi all, I am very new at this & this is my first attempt at using Adobe Audition to clean up & mix a VO. I would love feedback regarding the quality of the record as I am planning on joining voices.com in the near future, after my demo is recorded. Would this be anywhere near the quality what would be sent to a client on voices.com? Thank you all for the feedback! Equpment used: Shure MV88/A iOS Digital Stereo Condenser Microphone Bison Prosound Portable Microphone Isolation Shield Adobe Auditon CC 2018 1 closet : )

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-145460/script-recording-103141.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Performance: Wow! Very nice for early work! Your voice and vibe match the copy well. You could brighten it up even a little more by elevating both “World Taste Tour” and “McDonalds” with some upward inflection. Then give “Australia” a little more punch. (Think, “Wow, man! Australia!!”) Also, I would go back and tighten the intervals between the sentences, since you’re basically pitching kids—even the big ones! Broadcast time is expensive, and they have short attention spans!

    Technical: The production is nice, but even with the music, I’m hearing some “room.” Consider adding some moving blankets to any flat surfaces near the mic, and any uncovered parallel surfaces. The MV88 is basically two back-to-back cardioid capsules meant to capture a stereo image. If you can configure it so that there 100% overlap, that could really help reduce that room effect. Then try moving in close (maybe 3" with a pop filter) to take advantage of some proximity effect, and take another run at this script.

    Great start!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Greg.

    Very nice read and great script!!!
    I like the choice of music; it adds to the feel of the script.
    The pace, inflection, and energy were all very good!!!

    Diriest

    Peer Feedback:

    Your input recording levels are too high! Lots of distortion in the VO.

    Your input recording level should be between -6dB and -12dB peak. Then you would either normalize up to -3dB peak or get there through your processing FX.

    Not sure that the Shure MV88 is the best choice for VO recording. You don't need the stereo nature and the bidirectional cardioid pattern.

    Your setup will do for an audition "in a pinch". But if you're expected by a potential client to send in clean RAW audio for production, this may not make the cut. Proper room treatment (sound deadening) is the first essential ingredient. That includes deadening all of the hard and reflective surfaces - including the ceiling, floor and from behind you (where most of your room reflection will come from). Next is a decent single cardioid pattern XLR microphone/interface combination. (I am not keen on USB type microphones. They're good for poscasting and video chatting, but not for serous VO production, IMHO.) Adobe Audition is fine.

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    Milk Truck

    Script:

    The Borden’s Milk Truck was part of the fabric of American life in the 1950s. In fair weather or foul, yellow and white trucks with the familiar, smiling face of “Elsie the Cow” on their sides would make their rounds delivering the day’s milk. Now, you have the opportunity to own an authentic die-cast metal replica of a classic piece of Americana...the “1950 Borden’s Milk Truck”.

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear chrispa1's recording

    Would appreciate feedback on this please

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-140939/script-recording-102019.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice! Your voice adds to the nostalgia. Imagine putting your fingers in the air and making quote signs when reading “Elsie the Cow.” This makes for a slight dramatic pause and allows you to read the following phrasing more continuous. In the next phrasing, the comma after “Now” will allow you to read the next phrasing continuous. The elpsis after “Americana” sets you up for the dramatic ending! I love your piece!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this read. Personally, I think your voice would sound even better in promos and trailers. Have you ever considered reading copies for those?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks QuiceStraughter and Waynes7 - Yes I have been in radio for over 20 years.. so I need to work on the acting aspect I guess, not so much the classic promo and station imaging that I do love ;)

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    ModCloth

    Script:

    At ModCloth, we believe every outfit is an opportunity to express yourself. Inspired by vintage style and informed by today's sensibilities, we offer a curated wardrobe that lets you do just that.

    57 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear LMartin604's recording

    Back to voiceover after a 4 year hiatus. Coach asked me to get some feedback from you fantastic people! Starting off in the commercial realm, with the goal of selling without "selling" (you know, you know). Not looking for any notes on the mic/booth just yet. More style/read/performance. Any feedback appreciated! Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-13245/script-recording-103363.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice read! I enjoyed it. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job! I love the passion behind your voice. It really sounds like you believe in what you're saying. Cadence was on point. Also, quality is nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    My favorite part about this read was "this lets you do just that"! So casual and in line with the super hip brand that ModCloth represents.

    In general I think this is a pretty great read--if you're looking for pointers, I think I'd like to hear a touch more energy, but that might just be personal bias. It really is so good!

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    Moodyo.com

    Script:

    What is Moodyo?
    - Monica wants to buy ski boots, and doesn´t want to make the wrong decision
    - She wants them to be COMFORTABLE and CHIC-LOOKING for a GOOD PRICE
    - In the search engines, too many results pop up
    - In the social networks there aren´t any boots, she can only post a picture and ask her
    friends
    - Other types of social filters are FANTASTIC to ask for advice if you have hundreds of
    followers.
    - In other networks there are nice boots, but…ARE THEY GOOD QUALITY? ARE THEY RIGHT FOR ME? HOW MUCH ARE THEY?
    - In Moodyo, Mónica can find tons of ski boots.
    - The best brands, and products reviewed by specialists and users who have previous experience with these products
    - Monica reads reviews on the boots. After asking her contacts for advice in Moodyo, she can decide which ones she wants to buy.
    - By clicking on “I WANT IT”, the boots go to her wish list.
    - Her followers in Moodyo and her friends in other social networks will be advised that she is looking for ski boots.
    - After Monica buys the boots, she can change the status to “I HAVE IT”. This way, other shoppers can ask her how she likes them.
    - If she clicks on “I LOVE IT”, Moodyo will learn about Monica´s taste and will be able to offer her personalized suggestions using the “DISCOVER” button
    - Thanks to Moodyo, Monica not only made the best decision possible, but has also became a trendsetter at the same time. Now, when she clicks on "I have it", "I want it" or "I love it" her followers will know what´s in style.
    - And much more! With the Moodyo mobile application, you can carry the best shopping consultant with you in your pocket at all times
    - Shop smarter with the help of your friends in Moodyo

    122 people have played this

    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear TedVoInSpain's recording

    Directions were, Upbeat, excited, informative in parts, helpful and friendly. It was under a very tight time constraint and I saw an example video prior to recording the job. This was take 2 of three and Video can be found here for comparison (note, post production by them sped the dialogue just a titch, not my edit) http://vimeo.com/57250751 I'd be interested in what you think both after listening to the text, then perception changes, notes, additional comments after seeing the video. Thanks for your feedback as always in any form. Note, this is not my usual domain, this is probably one of a handful of commercial videos I've ever done.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8990/script-recording-48915.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you did a great job and followed directions very well. I see what you mean about speeding up the diologue....not your fault though. Good use of volume and annunciation.....it kept me paying attention.

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved it. I was compelled to check out the site after I heard this. I realized I have a very short attention span when listening to "commercials", Mainly because this one kept my attention longer than almost all others I've listened to. I think it was your tone and how much you seemed to really have fun with this. The sound quality was good (I'm listening on ear buds in a noisy coffee house). I did flinch a few times with some tonal words that came across louder than I was ready for. For what it's worth you kept my attention for the entire read and compelled me to check out the site.
    Be Well

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice work, Nodo420! I also watched the video after listening to the audio. It's great to "see" the role of the voice over artist in that kind of setting.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Ralph, Matt Eagen and VOA, for taking the time to listen, watch and comment. The feedback I get here is always invaluable. Ralph and Matt, it's high praise to catch anybody's attention and when I saw it was a 1:46, I thought maybe it's too looong for the forum. A lot of words... And for VOA, you might not know that I posted my very first ever "recorded spot" here on this forum in January last year. http://www.edgestudio.com/script/4320#recording-26501 which is precisely why I posted this. Not to boast, but to say, I came her, learned what to do by gleaning every particle of every corner of this site. By listening to stuff submitted and trying to understand what people were saying about other recordings. By listening to and then following those whose sound I liked and asking questions and sharing ideas. And being open to, and participating in sharing what I've learned as well as learning myself from others.
    At least 10 people I know here, on this site, could have, if the circumstances been different, done this same job probably better than me. The key is to be ready when the lightning strikes... Develop a style here, find out what you like and what works for you. Seek out the advice of the coaches here, on twitter and YouTube.
    I don't have any special skills. I have good, mid range equipment and a decent space (that has been subjected to more than it's share of being torn down and rebuilt :)) I'm just a guy, probably like you that may have wanted to give this a shot. There are no shortcuts. But, if you work your butt off, make it a priority in your life to learn how to do it, practice and listen to good advice from experts (Of which I am NOT)...and have a little luck (which I did), well, I can tell you it's a lot of fun. :) No de oo doe out! Nodo420

    Peer Feedback:

    Really good job
    Listened to both , recording and watched the video too.
    Have to agree it kept my interest all the way
    regards
    balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted,
    Very nice friendly read. I thought the tone was excellent. Great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Ted,
    Great job as I've already told you. Excellent work and worthy of the praise.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Rich and Javier...(you guys were in the 10 I mentioned)...

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, man...good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Ted! You are Mr Natural & Conversational...I believed you were really wanting to help Monica find the perfect pair of ski boots!!! Great job, it's hard making it sound this easy! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    It's kinda tricky isn't it? Not my normal tone of voice and it was so hard to "Hurry" but not sound harried. Let the words tumble, but keep control and then there are 3 distinct tonal changes. Like I said, I'd bet there are a handful of people who could have done this spot, you one, and you too Tom. Thanks you guys.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for sharing that, Nodo420. Very encouraging! I listened to your first recording too. You can definitely hear the growth.

    Peer Feedback:

    I Just wanted to add my 2 cents worth. No critiques whatsoever, Just a thank you. I started here recently and have had some fun with it though I don't try often enough. I also joined up with Librivox.org to practice recording audio books and since I have a regular job can't get everywhere all the time. Somehow my thoughts were directed here tonight and I was super encouraged to keep on practicing and not give up and use this forum for guidance and peer feedback in order to grow. Your comment to keep it up is what I needed this day to keep on keeping on. Thanks ever so much.

    Peer Feedback:

    You did an Awesome job Ted, keep up the great work!!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    Movie Gallery

    Script:

    "Poof"
    Script:

    Have you ever noticed what happens when you put in a movie?
    It's amazing.
    You just stick it in,
    Sit back,
    Hit play, and...
    Poof.
    The rest of the world just disappears.
    Gone.
    Suddenly, it's just you and your family.
    You remember them. Your family. Some of them look like you.
    At Movie Gallery, we have thousands of great movies. Including your favorite holiday movies plus the latest releases. And every one of them is guaranteed to have the same magical powers.

    Movie Gallery.
    Play on.

    92 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Crosier's recording

    Last one for today...I promise. Have enjoyed having a day to mess around, doing some practice.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6103/script-recording-90385.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The overall voice was great for this but I feel the tone needs to rise just a bit more in several spots. It's darn near to being exactly the voice and tone I think about for this type of commercial.

    The one major thing that stood out to me is on a few occasions the tone dropped an energy level or two where it shouldn't, especially where comedy is being delivered. On a few occasions the tempo went up just a tad too high at the same time which made it sound like it was just reading.

    The word "disappears" dropped in energy toward the end. It's jarring how the energy of that sentence falls as far as it does and then suddenly you're smacked with "Gone". Objectively I think "Gone" has the right energy level and emphasis. But when it's paired with the previous sentence it doesn't synch. They're not supposed to be delivered the same way, but maybe raise the previous sentence up a little bit.

    The joke about remembering family lacked that extra hint of needed sarcasm. Try having a wry smile on your face. It's like you caught this guy or girl forgetting their own family and you're here to playfully remind them

    The list "Stick it in...Sit back....etc" is also read with very little variation.

    Normally you want to add some pitch changes or extend certain words so that the list doesn't feel repetitive as it's being read.

    Stick it in could have a slightly elevated pitch, then sit back can be lowered, then with the last one something is about to go poof. I feel like it would be effective to raise the pitch a little and then extend the "aaannnd... Poof." You don't have to do these exact things but these are just examples of ways to liven up the list reading.

    Something about the delivery of the very first word sounds like it's trembling a little.

    Everything at the end after "At Movie Gallery..." seems great. Tempo is just right, the pauses feel just right and you put just the right emphasis and tone on the words.

    Even though I think the tone could have been delivered differently in several spots your overall voice conveys a wry, playful, yet authoritative tone which I think is perfect for this script.

    Peer Feedback:

    As you can see by the number of listens to all FIVE of your posts in a row to the amount of critique you've received, you've kind of bombarded the Forum and not a lot of people have a lot to say.

    Unwritten rule: Try not to submit more than 2 posts in a 24 hour period. It forces others further down in the queue who may not get their sub,missions heard and receive critique that they might benefit from.

    There's also a glitch in the software that Edge uses. If you don't wait that 24 hours - even if someone else posts a recording on the Forum - the software will line your posts up one after the other anyway. (Found that out the hard way.)

    Yeah, it's lots of fun to do a lot of recording once you have the time to get back into the booth, but space out the submissions so that you might actually get some useful critique on ALL of them.

    Jumping down from my soapbox now.

    As for this one: There is a little room echo in here that wasn't present in the submissions with a music bed. Some hard edits in here too. (Maybe the use of a noise gate as well?) Some plosive popping as well.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought it was really well done. The recording quality has good presence but a little bright still. Some reflections coming into the mic, try a different placement (maybe into a corner with treatment about 2 feet away) The performance had great good tone and timing for the piece. I would think you would get a call back on this for a submission. The casting would take care of the little nuances that those above commented, so I wouldn't worry about them too much. As they said, " I heard it a bit differently in my head", keep in mind this would be your audition and they are competition so the call would be up to the CD. Generally your impression of the read is important and the flow was well delivered.

    I think you have the chops for the business. Good work.

    Danny

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    Navigon GPS

    Script:

    Navigon. The only GPS devices with Reality View and Lifetime Traffic. Get from point A to B without a single F.

    71 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-144169/script-recording-103886.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Denrock, 1st, performance. It sounds good to me. It is difficult to know how this might be used, but it seems most obvious it would be a tag line in a TV ad. You read was relatable and punchy. The pace was varied, but could have been a bit more so. 2nd, recording quality: sounds like made with a built in lap top mic, maybe on a MacBook Pro. You will need a better set up eventually. All the best to you!

    Peer Feedback:

    The pace is a bit linear. But I think overall you did well. Keep up the good work!

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    Netflix

    Script:

    Sign up today and try Netflix for free. Free Shipping – both ways! No late fees – Keep DVDs as long as you want! Over 75,000 titles – classics to new releases to TV series! Cancel anytime. We are confident that you will agree with our 6 million members: Netflix is the best way to rent DVDs.

    87 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear denrocks10's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-144169/script-recording-103979.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Denrock. Good job. I would like more tonal fluctuation as it all seemed to lie on the same path. The "confident" almost sounded like a sneeze..I mean not literally but spit out a bit ? keep it up !

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    Odysee Putters

    Script:

    Putting. It’s a game within a game. One with many challenges, but few masters. It’s where three feet can feel like three miles. And where good days are separated from bad days by mere inches. It’s where muscle strength doesn’t matter, but mental strength does. And if you lose control of this game, this game controls you. Welcome to Odyssey. It’s time to even the score.

    75 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mnicholson2003's recording

    I included some outdoor ambient sounds in this take.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-154143/script-recording-105245.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like the pacing and emotional aspects of your performance and the production too! Maybe just a bit less inflection. Really nice work. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dang, dude. You are good. Nice voice, good rhythm. You sound totally professional to me.

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    99 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear touzet's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-65861/script-recording-83822.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Okay, that made me laugh out loud. And again the second time I listened. That was fantastic! Loved it. This spot was made for you. The only thing I noticed was when I put my headphones on, there was a slight echo, hollow sound in your space. Other than that, spectacular :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Great ad. love it.
    Check out a funny "Monster Truck" ad from my buddy Scott Burns:
    https://soundcloud.com/scottwesleyburns/wsl7435-trucksandbucks-60

    if you knew how tenor is voice really is, you'd really get how funny this is.
    great job!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dave, I checked out the Scott Burns thing...very cool. I heard a few of his other things so I got a feel for his general pitch.

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    Pain Patch

    Script:

    For immediate relief that soothes muscle pain right where you need it and lasts up to 8 hours, get Pain Patch by Mentholatum. Pain Patch. Relief that's right - here and now.

    24 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    2 takes. First is :15 hard sell. Second is :10 soft sell.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/PainPatch-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    James, I liked the second read more. Only "here and now" sounded a bit off.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just wondering why you delivered the soft sell version 5 seconds faster? It sounded rushed to me. Great show of versatility, James.

    Peer Feedback:

    The wife says I talk too slowly.

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked number 1. Nice pace. The second seemed too rushed. I thought I heard some extra s sounds in number one.

    I wonder if your wife is reading along with the script as she listens or already knows it well? Or maybe it's because you have the marriage short-hand thing going so that she catches what your saying so quickly and feels impatient with the pace that would be right for someone hearing you on the radio for the first time.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Javier. I liked the second one better. You sped up at "get pain patch" disrupting what I thought was a good pace just prior.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read! I liked the first read better, but the 2nd was very good as well. I would hire you if I was a casting director.

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    Peacocks and Pearls

    Script:

    SHOP PEACOCKS AND PEARLS, YOUR DESTINATION FOR UNIQUE, QUALITY OPTIONS FOR YOUR MOST SPECIAL OCCASSIONS. WORKDAY TO WEEKEND- WE PROVIDE AFFORDABLE BOUTIQUE STYLE FOR WOMEN OF ALL AGES! WITH NEW PIECES ADDED DAILY, SHOP IN STORE OR ONLINE AT PEACOCKS AND PEARLS LEX DOT COM.

    74 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Chrissy Bartels's recording

    I have a new mic, how does it sound!? How is the background noise?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Chrissy

    Thanks for listening to the audition I sent and for your feed back.

    -I don't know what mic you had before but I did not hear any back ground noise. So if that was an issue it no longer is.
    -Vocal Performance: You have a very nice voice and a nice smooth southern accent. Wondering if a second take you could try a Neutral English. I am a NYer, born and raised here and I have to be careful not to let that cat out of the bag when they are asking for a neutral read. I think your emotional take was natural however I found the pace too fast I would suggest a slower read and also since this is an affordable boutique perhaps and emphasis on that component of the shop.

    The second take something happened with the editing that made the beginning of the take somewhat jumbled. Take a listen...
    Nice job!

    Lenny

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear deidreannjohnson's recording

    I have hopefully incorporated the feedback received when I last read this copy. Again, looking for phrasing, pacing, interpretation and personality. Thanks. Forgive me if this has been uploaded twice, there was a glitch on my end.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is good, its just at some parts of the read you sounded a bit uncomfortable. When you said "Trust them" you kinda paused there, maybe try reading the script through a bit more to become familiar with it so that you don't stumble or pause.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice clean voice and beautiful tone. The words tend to get caught in your mouth on sentences. This is generally from rushing through the script. Learn to tap your foot when you read to get a beat to follow. Scripts follow a time signature same as a song. Learn to do it, it will help you a great deal in getting your timing down as well as your breathing.

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    Peppridge Farm Magic

    Script:

    If you're going to have a cookie . . . Have a COOKIE!
    Pepperidge Farm
    Never have an ordinary day.

    54 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear carol1973's recording

    I'm a newbie interested in further VO training & would like to work with a mentor. I'll appreciate any feedback/suggestions you have to offer!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Carol .... welcome to the forum. Try it again with the emotion the your a kid getting their favorite cookie, and put so smile into it!

    Peer Feedback:

    A little more emotion in "If you're going to have a cookie" and back it down just a bit in "Have a cookie!". Recording quality was studio perfect.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Waltonia's recording

    AAarrggh! Missed the deadline by 10 minutes after all that, so I'll just post it here. This was to be my script contest entry. My take was that since this is a Youtube ad, it should be quick; of course it could be one of those that don't let you skip it, in which case, bad call, but there it is.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Without presuming what the Contest judges will have to offer, here's my 2c.

    There are a lot of clues in the Director's Notes, particularly in the first sentence. If this is to play before a YouTube video (usually anywhere from 10 seconds to a full 30 seconds, depending on the product/service), it has to grab you right from the top, otherwise the viewer has about 3 seconds to click on "Skip Ad" to watch the selected video. These are called "flash ads". And it's how YouTubers make their money.

    The second thing is that the actions will be quick cuts of cats doing silly things - and who doesn't like to watch that? - with those two suggested, every-so-slight pauses just clean enough for the editor. You aren't (and your VO isn't) what's really important, it's the visual and it's getting the product out cleanly (PetSmart) along with the $2 off message (there will probably be a "super" of the logo and "Save $2" at the end anyway). So, it's not about you and your gorgeous voice, it's about the brand and saving money. You're just a supporting character to reinforce the visual message.

    So, I'm inclined to think that this whole presentation will fit into a 10 second (or less) time frame, so there's not a whole lot of time to be indulgent. Plow through it with as much up, fun and amusing personality as you can put into it (don't waste time with a laugh or chuckle, let the viewer find the funny for themselves), leaving those two itty-bitty pauses for the editor. The whole thing could probably be done on one breath (at the beginning).

    All of that said, you're most of the way there.

    Sound quality is good.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks James. I was thinking the same thing about the "Skip it" button--get it done before we lose the viewer. I think after the slate, I clocked in at about 13 seconds, but I could've cut out the breaks between the last couple of phrases. I also think my "petsmart" was the sloppiest and most rushed of it all which has got to be bad. I would at least re-do it for a clearer enunciation of the brand.
    I'm also with you about the chuckle. That's for the viewer. The VO is serious about smart cats and then this silly thing undermines his argument. That makes it even more funny (to me at least).
    So under 10 seconds in one breath? Challenge accepted.

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    PGA Superstore

    Script:

    PGA TOUR SUPERSTORE
    You can’t teach what they’re born with. But that won’t stop us from trying. The PGA Superstore has arrived! Over 55,000 square feet of everything you need to push your game to its full potential. And we’ll even help you look good while doing it. One visit and you’ll agree, it’s more than a store. It’s a total game changer.

    22 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    In anticipation of cutting my demo with Edge, I scoured magazine and print ads to find original copy. This is something I edited from a direct mail solicitation. I have changed directions somewhat, but I didn't want this script to go to waste. I only incorporated a few sound effects and no manipulation. My goals were to lay it down in one take and not to rush. So, here it is. Warts and all.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James. I liked the approach to this script. Here are a couple of things I would recommend from the way I read it, to help give back on the way you critique.

    On the first line I would tend to be more assertive ... similar to pointing a finger and saying it (you-can't-teach .... what their born with!) Make the listener ask "teach what?"

    But that won't stop us from trying ... (make them say ... HUH?) I'd allow a little more time for these 2 lines to hold their attention.

    The PGA store has arrived ... I would use upwards inflection on P and A similar to PgA store HAS ARRIVED! I've been waiting for that store to open ... get me pumped about it ... I golf, In fact I just played indoors today! That line needs energy. I'd go so far as to say "be announcerish"!

    The rest sounds conversational and that may work in showing that side for the demo, but I would also sound like a golf announcer on that part like Tiger making the 60 foot put to win the masters ... hope this helps! Daniel

    Peer Feedback:

    Ever get so close to something you can't see the forest for the trees? Or you just overthink it? Just after I posted this, I went out for a while and stewed about it the whole time. Now, all I want to do is redo it. Sometimes it's better to step away for a while and come back with fresh ears.

    In my hurry not to rush, it just lost most, if not all, of its character.

    You're absolutely correct about PGA and the rest of that line. Probably should even carry it on into "55,000 sq ft ---" 'cause that's a lot of square feet of all that stuff! Kinda missed the funny of the next line too.

    I like the idea of the hushed golf announcer. Just not sure how to make that abrupt a transition. Another acting exercise?

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm glad I could give something back in a constructive way to try and help. There are lots of cool ways to reflect your talents and you can use some or all of them in a script, it's just trying them and seeing if they work for you. The golf announcer can be hushed or an OMG moment ... he dropped it ... or missed it type of reaction, that's your creative choice for your demo. I just know your capable of making this better and I would like to see you feel confident, cause once a demo is done the money is gone and your waiting for it to roll back in to do it all over again! Have fun with too! There should be some smile along the way to show the side that golf is a gentleman's sport and it is fun to play.

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    Playtex My Size

    Script:

    Playtex My Size
    Perfect Fit. In half size cups. Like its tailor-made. Playtex introduces My Size. The first range of bras in both regular and half-size cups. Designed especially for you. My Size. From Playtex.

    42 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear MelanieMurphyVO's recording

    Working on smoothness & speed without being too fast, choppy or fake. I'm happy to have any feedback - but ladies, since you are the target audience, I'd love to hear from you. Are you buying the bra or not??? :o) Thanks all! ~Melanie

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    Peer Feedback:

    I just love your voice in this. And I like many of the parts. But there's something choppy about putting them together, though, and I feel out of my depth in trying to figure it out. Maybe it's fine because there would be images on the screen in between each phrase? Sorry! I so want to pitch in for another gal, but it's sooo far into the realm of commercials and outside my comfort zone.

    Peer Feedback:

    Try putting your mic on a 45 degree angle to your mouth. So that you are not speaking directly into the mic. It will help in avoiding the plosive effect of your "P's".

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Melanie, I like the tone of your voice in this, you sound sincere for the most part. Just a Leeeeetle too perky at the first "cups" and the first "my size." "Made" is a little long. You finished really well at the ending.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good stuff. Thanks all. And Tonia - I appreciate you posting, even if you can't quite put your finger on the issue.

    Peer Feedback:

    I heard just a little bit of echo in your recording but other than that it sounded clean. I like your chatty delivery. It sounded like someone shopping with a friend and introducing her to a new product.

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    Power Wheels Boomerang

    Script:

    Power Wheels Boomerang - Extreme power, on or off the road. Boomerang conquers rough trails. You can control spinouts. Power Wheels Boomerang--the ultimate thrill ride. Only at ToysRUs.

    49 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear maestro_wsmith's recording

    Not my ideal recording space, but just looking for feedback on the performance. This is a TV spot.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I love the enthusiasm and gruff in the voice, I think it's exactly what this product needs. I do think the words can get a bit punchy, as in too separated between pronouncing each of them, mainly thinking of the line, Boomerang conquers rough trails.

    The recording quality seemed good, not my specialty but if I had to say anything, maybe a little quiet?

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    Practice Script Read

    Script:

    What makes a gift...unforgettable? What makes a single moment...a lifetime memory? The answer lies in the distinctive and eclectic collections at A & C Diamonds in Savannah. The timeless treasures that adorn life's hallmark moments should never be purchased in haste. Nor should the search for a cherished gift be left to chance.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear chrispa1's recording

    Feedback on this please

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really like the pacing and inflection. I didn't hear anything off in the audio/recording. Nice read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you cryssken!

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    Purina One Brand 2

    Script:

    Purina One Special Formula For Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.

    66 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mahlik Johnson's recording

    Hey everyone! I'd love any and all feedback on this. Whatever comes to mind. Thank you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is a humorous spot but I don't think your performance delivers the joke as well as you could. Maybe that rather dead pan read is intentional? If so, it wasn't what I was expecting. I think a producer would want to hear another take where you play up the humor a bit more, especially "Great news for your canary" and "your canary will thank you for it." Why not record another such take and notice the difference. Good clarity and narrow inflection -- dead pan. Try to delete any pauses at the start of a clip, so the listener hears you immediately. Thanks for sharing. Bill A.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for your feedback Bill! I'll be sure to work on what you pointed out. Take 2 on the way!

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    Purina One Brand

    Script:

    Purina One Special Formula For Cats is made with real chicken. Good news for your cat. Great news for your canary. For a complete adult diet for your cat and the real chicken he wants, give him Purina One Special Formula. Your canary will thank you for it. Purina One. Second to none.

    53 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Mahlik Johnson's recording

    Hey fellow talent! This is my second attempt at this script. I'm really just hoping for progress since my last time around. As always, thank you for any feedback you give. Mahlik

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    Peer Feedback:

    Mahlik I love your voice, the recording quality is good, great pace. I would like to hear more of a smile in your execution. But overall good.

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    Purina Pro Plan OM - Bella

    Script:

    Bella and I have been through everything together. But you try telling your best bud that shes put on a few extra pounds. (Bark).
    Thats why now I only feed her Purina Pro Plan OM.

    Purina Pro Plan OM contains no fillers and is proven to make dogs visibly healthier in just 2 weeks. Plus it’s made with the real chicken and beef that she loves.

    Best part is Bella is back to being her old energetic self again. Now, If only i could get her to stop stealing my slippers.

    For a limited time get 20% off your first bag , by signing up for the healthy dog challenge at purina.com/challenge
    Purina Pro Plan OM. Because Healthy Dogs are Happy Dogs

    (by NateVo)

    80 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear NateVo's recording

    Dog food spot I wrote based off some samples and some real ads. Is this interesting/good enough for a possible demo spot, and how do you feel I can improve it more? Looking for feedback on everything and anything. Thanks in advance !

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your audio quality sounds good to me, but I'm no expert. Your pauses in the 2nd paragraph sound a bit unnatural, but I like how your voice lilts in the rest of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great script and really nicely read. you paced it for :30, another nice detail.

    Production thoughts: Music bed is levelled a bit high for a VO audition. Let the voice come through a little more. Also the dog bark sounded like a sneeze :-)

    Great job. nice spot.

    DS

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    Purina

    Script:

    We got a dog...for the kids. Okay, so I became attached. Soooo my wife calls it obsessive. I just wanted a perfect food for my dog. Talked to the vet...talked to the breeders...read books...Okay, two words: Go shopping! That’s when I found Purina One Brand Lamb & Rice Formula. First ingredient...lamb. I think we found our dog food. Me...obsessive?...I don’t think so. Purina One. Second to none.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Michael Hughes's recording

    Let me have it! I wasn't happy with the "That's when I found" section. It doesn't flow in my head well. That's the struggle, I understand. Happy Friday everyone!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Michael,
    I think your voice is really good for this -- you have a kind everyman tone that works well. I think the not flowing in your head problem isn't you either. This script really doesn't make a lot of sense -- sentence 1 to sentence 2 I don't get the "okay" and then after the Talked to Vets, talked to breeders, etc...what's the "two words: go shopping?"
    I'd have asked for some clarification from the writers on this, but jn lieu of that, I think you've done fine work here!

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this recording a lot. You sounded conversational and I love the sheepish tone that came into your voice as you said "Okay, I got attached". The sentence structure is, as far as I can tell, free-flowing, the way it would be if you were telling a friend you hadn't seen for a while about getting the dog and the dog food. It could have been similar to a stand-up comic as well. Anyway, great read.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think it's a very solid job, although might pick up the pace a smidge. The script could come out as kind of goofy, right? I think in another take I'd have you go more easy-breezy--more confident and wry or self deprecating or funny. As it is, it's engaging but also a little earnest. I think the client could really like that... people love their pets. And I bet many reads would sound like what you've done. Could be good to have a second take that's a little different than the expected, too.

    I can't speak to recording quality cuz I'm using my ear buds on my tablet.

    Nice work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, thanks guys. I appreciate the positive feed back. That's it. I'm quitting my day job! No, I kid. Its nice to hear from you though.

    I'm glad it wasn't just me than Daniel. I see some things I could have done though.

    Sounding conversational and as if I am talking to a friend is quite possibly the best compliment one can get, Chris. I thank you.

    A second read would have been good for this. I'm still one dimensional. I saw I came in at ;32 I thought a had some junk to take out to get at ;30 but couldn't make up enough ground to make the mark. I'm working on it though. The quality is minimal. I am still figuring out my room, as well as fine tuning my gating and EQ. Upgraded recently to a 2i2. The plug ins are a learning curve for me. Thanks

    I may have to give this another go. Stay tuned. Ha!

    Peer Feedback:

    To danielmarrin's point about the script not making sense - You would have to be very careful about questioning the copy. Copy writers have pretty big egos, so you would have to tread lightly.

    Chris and Tonia hit on it. It's a stream-of -consciousness kind of copy. And as such, some things are important and some not so much. And the less important things can be tossed off a bit - moved through more quickly.

    IMHO, I think that this is an on-camera commercial and not a VO. BUT, it could be a radio spot, in which case you need to assume a character (which you did). However, radio ads need to be tighter. What I mean is, all or most of those pauses have to go.

    The ellipses threw you off. If this were a narration (like a documentary), the writer would use the ellipses for pauses, possibly for visuals or just to slow down the narrative. And ellipses are also used that way for TV commercials - spaces for the images. But for radio, where time is money and dead air would cause a listener to change stations, you might think of treating ellipses in much the same way as a playwright would intend them. As overlapping dialogue. That may be one way to treat that 5th (and the 9th) sentence, just run one thing into another - "Did the research...Go to the store, already!"

    And that's where you find your solution. Here's where you can slow down (which you did). You're introducing the product (which you did nicely). Everything that came before is just fluff. It's fun stuff to tell but not as important (especially to the cient, Purina One), so you can ramble through it at a little faster clip.

    Then right in the middle of the wrap-up, there's that little interjection, "Me...obsessive?...I don’t think so." IMHO - It's another toss-off. The more important information (which will make the client very happy) is the tag.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Balazs Pusztahazi's recording

    comments welcome

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice work, Balazs!
    this read really begs to have the visuals with it. it would explain the timing and pacing so much better if I could "watch"...so I just imagined it.

    I've been taught that in TV commercials, the voice over is really a "voice under" the visuals, so I think you could bring the soundscape more to the front to simulate that effect.

    Great job.
    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Balazs, I didn't feel a commitment to the script. It DARED men FURTHER. It was a WITness etc....It just didn't deliver the commitment I thought it should have.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave thanks for your comment
    I took this from a newspaper ad wasn't sure how long should I make the recording as you say I wanted to imagine the visuals. Listening back I agree the background could be louder a bit.
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    Txtom
    I have to agree with you too on the performance side of the recording. Back to the drawing board :).
    Thanks for your time and comment .
    Regards
    Balazs

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    SaveAll Christmas

    Script:

    Argh! Christmas is just around the corner, and I still have so much shopping to do! Timmy wants the latest gizmos and gadgets and Samantha simply can’t live without those new boots. Thank goodness there’s a SaveAll right around the corner! When you’re playing everyone’s Santa, save on it all – at SaveAll.

    22 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jessicapoingt's recording

    - First time doing a commercial type read - First time trying out the mic

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jessica:
    I like your voice for the read, I could see you playing the flustered mom for sure. The first thing that comes to my mind is that you didn't "hit" (emphasize) the name of the company the first time around-- and if I hadn't read it, or heard you do the slate, I'm not sure I would know what you said (since I'm not familiar with SaveAll). Also there is something a bit acoustically harsh going on, to my ears at least (I'm a newbie so I'll leave the technical diagnosis to the vets on the forum). Good luck,
    Peter

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    Scott's Surf Shop

    Script:

    Ready for some fun in the Sun? Not without our oversized beach towels! Scott's Surf Shop has everything to cover you at the beach, including swimming apparel, sun block, scuba gear, flip flops and oversized beach towels made with shake-away technology that makes sure you leave the beach at the beach. Before you drive to the cottage, stop by Scott's Surf Shop to start your summer off Right!

    64 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear marvincb's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    This sounds awesome! Your voice is super calming while also being persuasive. I would recommend fluctuating in tone slightly more to make it more grabbing at some points. Overall, I Ioved listening to your voice.

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Bf Goodrich Tires

    The things that go bump underneath your truck are downright scary. Which is why you need some monsters of your own. BF Goodrich light truck tires are big. They're tough. They're fierce-looking. Off-the-shelf BF Goodrich tires have won more major off-road races and rock-crawling championships than any other. So visit your BF Goodrich tires retailer. And turn your truck into a monster truck. Call 1-877-BFG-TIRE or visit www.bfgoodrichtires.com. Put some monsters under your bed. BF Goodrich tires. Take control.

    19 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Just curious to know if the music bed and sound effects are ok. Still working on this character voice, I think I need a lozenge. I'm aware that I forgot the dot after www.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Bf Goodrich Tires.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great job! Sounded rough and rugged--I could picture your character voice in my head. I also loved the music bed and sound effects.

    Peer Feedback:

    You can hear where you are trying to really use your lower register, and you can also hear where that failed and you pushed too far and it cracked. Don't try to go beyond your capabilities, if a director wanted someone with a low "gravelly" voice and you submitted that, it may not work in your favor. I think you have a great voice when you stay inside your natural range. You can still get the same message across, and more effectively. There are also exercises you can do to warm the vocal chords and open the throat more to get that type of voice with regular practice. Search the net. Good job on the production.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, excellent advice.

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    Script submitted by Jae B

    Script:

    Clorox Disinfecting Wipes 2

    Clorox Disinfecting Wipes. One-step cleaning and disinfecting. Lemon fresh. Bleach free. From Clorox.

    75 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jae B's recording

    Hello, I'm working on my 1st Commercial Demo. I'm new to the voice over world and would love honest feedback. Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jae B, I thought your delivery was good. Maybe add just a touch of confidence. I heard a small amount of room noise. All in all, I think a solid spot.

    Peer Feedback:

    Love the the read! Just a lot of room noise. Make sure to clear that up!

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    Script submitted by Jjoyce

    Script:

    This is an audition that I previously did. I would appreciate feedback on technique and sound quality. Thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Jjoyce's recording

    This is an audition that I previously did. I would appreciate feedback on technique and sound quality. Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I can tell you are having fun with the script. If this was an audition you should try taking out your mouth and breath noises and I think I hear a bit of room echo. Please take this the right way...your read sounds like you are reading to young children...are you a teacher? If so, I would want to be in your class!

    Peer Feedback:

    Melissa,
    Thank you for taking the time to listen and comment. I appreciate your feedback and will work to edit out the mouth and breath noises. I'm not a teacher, but I am a very proud Grandmother!

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    Script submitted by melbatoast721

    Script:

    Macie's Own supports this segment. Macie's Own Dog Treats are made with USDA inspected turkey, chicken, and duck and smoked with real hickory wood. Locally produced and packaged in Lambertville, New Jersey, they are an all-natural treat for your dog and do not contain any artificial preservatives, by-products, or fillers. Macie's Own Dog Treats are sold only through independent pet stores such as Barkley's in downtown Flemington.

    46 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear melbatoast721's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good timing.

    Be a little more deliberate with the first line - the introduction. What do you think it means?

    This is obviously for a TV show on animals, and dogs specifically. So, "this segment" is that portion of the show that Macie's Own is the sponsor of.

    Then comes the commercial copy proper.

    Your energy kind of dropped from beginning to end. Keep a smile in your voice. think of all of those healthy, wet-nosed puppies that Macie's Own Dog Treats are going to keep happy and healthy. Put a picture of them in your booth to look at while you record this. the read will be different.

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    Script submitted by mmordell

    Script:

    It never ceases to amaze me - get sick and everybody has a home remedy.
    My Aunt Emma's “cure all” is crushed garlic and Limburger cheese - in a sock tied around her neck.

    “I never get sick” she says. That's, cause nobody can get within 50 yards of the woman.

    Then there's my cousin Moon Beam from California.
    Swears by frozen Tofu Daiquiris.

    And my mother - anytime she hears me sneeze wants to give me an oil and vinegar rub down. Great - unless you wanna smell like a salad bar for a week.

    Me, I just go down to Winn Dixie.
    There, low prices alone make me feel better, and by the time I go pick up some chicken my prescription is ready.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mmordell's recording

    I'm a noob. Working on technique. I hope I captured the fun!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I could see that you tried to vary your town to capture the quirky nature of this copy. I think you had the right idea, but the differences could be a little more pronounced. I'd also slow down a tiny bit. Also, some words got jarbled: "There, *low* prices alone..." is a one example. Good work though!

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    Script submitted by tjstorms

    Script:

    Mercedes Benz C-Class

    Why did we give the new C-class almost 260 pounds of torque? Why did we equip it with Blue-tooth, Serius satellite radio, and a surround sound system? And why did we engineer every component to perform at Autobhan speeds? Why, because we promised you a Mercedes Benz, that’s why.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear tjstorms's recording

    This is my first submission to the feedback forum. I've been hearing alot of great pipes on this forum, so I know I have quite a ways to go to get where the great talent is... any recommendation of genre you think my voice would fit would also be helpful, too. Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice for a first go, Good pacing, tone, and so on. For your voice, I think this is a fine genre, I could just as easily hear you doing audiobooks, and alike. The first thing I would jump on trying to master, is what the majority of us work on... sounding conversational. I found the easiest for that to be the Narrative documentary. Then, once you get a use to not being the "announcer guy" , try some off the wall character stuff,, get use to doing things that "feel silly"- get over the fear of looking odd. People make a living being odd. For the most part, this forum is a good place to try pushing the limits,, and seeing what works and what does not. Keep in mind, its all just people's opinions, some may be helpful, some not. If in the end, your able to sell your "style" , then thats what makes it right or wrong. There is a webcast called VO Buzz welekely, and on there a while back they were talking to a guy who has been doing VO for 15 years, and is one of the main guys doing trailers right now. He sent a demo in to a new producer, and the producer responded back, that he did not think the guy would make it in the business. Its just an opinion, for that moment, on that spot. No one is right for everything, or everyone. Its been said a number if times,, if you don't get a gig, its their selection, not your rejection. Just like getting a date at the bar, its a numbers game as well,, the more you try, the better you'll do. Good luck enjoy. And ask lots of questions, and make lots of mistakes.. it gets them out of the way early.

    Peer Feedback:

    Like knm said, you are going to get a lot of different critiques and opinions from people here, some valuable and some not, and you will have to decide what you will eventually take to heart or not. Just know that this is only my 2c, so take it for what it's worth.

    My first suggestion is not to fully produce your reads with music and FX for now. Let us hear what you (your voice) sound(s) like and what you bring to the copy.

    Some others are really good at giving suggestions about technical issues. It seems to me that your voice is really muffled in this recording. It would be helpful if you could tell us what your setup is - what mic, interface, computer and software you are using and your room conditions (how live or dead your space is).

    Another aspect is breaking down the copy, picking it apart and discovering its elements and message. I am particularly fond of this piece of copy because I think that it is extremely well written (which a lot of copy is not). And it also has some pitfalls to be aware of.

    The first thing is, "What the heck do I do with all of those questions?" Well, the usual way of asking a question is to go upward in inflection at the end of the sentence. But think about this. Are you really expecting answers, or are these rhetorical questions? (You give the answer at the end, but I'm getting ahead of myself.) So, maybe, they don't always have to inflect up at the end, Many rhetorical questions don't.

    Then there's this pattern. It's a list of three questions. And within the second question, there's another list of three things. Lists are things to look out for and can be problematic in themselves. And a list within a list? Well,... How do you treat 'em? With a little variety - in inflection, intention, speed, etc.

    And here comes my biggest bugaboo about this particular piece of copy, the last sentence.

    You've already asked three questions and the sentences have question marks at the end of them to (obviously) indicate that fact. But this one starts with, what might seem, a word associated with asking a question - the same word that all of the other sentences (questions) start with. But there's no question mark - there's a comma.

    Any good comic (or copywriter) knows that jokes work in threes. Four is pushing it - and more than that just doesn't work (isn't funny) unless you're very, very good.

    So, this last sentence is not a question, but the answer to the previous three. The first word, in effect, really doesn't even need to be there for it to make sense. Why ask "why?", separately, for a fourth time? It doesn't fit the pattern of three (or the three within the three). But the copywriter put it there (with a comma) for a reason, a purpose. What that is? Who knows. But the sentence's interpretation, in my view, is more like, "Why, it's elementary, my dear Watson." or "Why, I'll be darned." Just an interjection, not even a word, really.

    I would also submit that, because the copywriter would have a say in the final casting of this spot, if he heard that question mark where he deliberately did not put it, that reader wouldn't stand a ghost of a chance of booking this job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks knm.
    I had a little chuckle - your statement: "Then, once you get a use to not being the "announcer guy" , try some off the wall character stuff, get use to doing things that "feel silly"- get over the fear of looking odd. People make a living being odd." Is ironic, because being silly and odd is where I started off at at a young age. As a little boy, I lived in a diverse neighborhood and picked up on the different ways people spoke, so I'd imitate the accents. I also did impressions of teachers, famous people or anybody on my radar, so it's actually been a stretch for me to do "serious" as in this recording. Being silly comes naturally to me..almost to a "fault"... but that is one of the reasons for my desire to do voice over... Because although I know I need alot of work and practice, it just feels natural to me.
    Thank you for taking the time to share your thoughtful insight.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,
    Thank you. I am using a regular Blue Yeti and a Mac Mini with GarageBand. The room is an untreated office about 10'x12'. Right now, I am using a homemade padded mini booth to kill ambient room noise and echo (more to kill echo as it's already very quiet) but it may be too small adding to the muffliness - it's 15" x 11" x 11" and with the padding is even more confined.
    I think the muffle may also be a combo of gain being a little too high and I'm about six inches from the mic, but if I move further back with the mic in the mini booth the clarity improves a little, inversely proportionate to the infiltration of the echo :-). So I need to improve on the booth by either buying or making a bigger and better one.
    At first, I attributed the muffle to crappy speakers. However, other peoples demos were sounding clear, so that helped me rule out the speakers.
    Thank you greatly for your contributions to this forum - the insight on the aspect of script interpretation - it appears the last sentence is a bugaboo in alot of scripts ("Why did Leon STAY?"... from a recent contest) it is so true that you really need to take the time to know and feel what the intention of the copywriter is.
    Thanks again!

    Update - I did some testing and the muffle is coming from the booth - the foam I used isn't dense enough and the plastic tote is able to resonate. Must... build... better... booth...

    Peer Feedback:

    TJ,
    Your comments remind me of things Rob Paulsen (Pinky of Pinky and the Brain) has said, particularly about making a living at what he got in trouble for as a kid. However, not only is he off the wall, but can sound very natural. He was the Honda Mr. Opportunity guy in their 2008 campaign.

    That said, I agree with previous comments, you need to sound more natural. Try to talk to one person. Maurice LaMarche (Brain of the same series) is currently the Lexus guy. He said that when he does his commercials he pictures speaking to one person, his best friend.

    On another note, aside from giving you the possibility of a Character guy doing a real guy in a commercial. You need to BE someone in the commercial, even the announcer is a person, he has a personality, a character. So, when you read this, BE a character talking to someone specific.

    Just my two cents. By the way you've got a nice voice that could be used in a number of genre's; find one that works for you by practicing them all.

    Josh

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Josh,

    At times, when reading copy, I've wondered "who" or "how many" I should be talking to.
    The one person makes total sense in this case. Especially when the word "you" is in play. Although I need to revisit Wolfson's video on "dropping the pronouns" .

    Thanks for your 2c - I'm investing it and hopefully be able to pay it back with dividends...

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey TJ,
    From what I've been told the "how many" should always be one. The reason is that the person listening is always singular; you should sound like you are talking to them. The "who" is usually determined by the copy; it's the target demographic the piece was written for, but to a large extent this needs to be personified, someone you can identify with on some level. A 35-50 year old male would not be good enough; in this case, it would be someone who appreciates cars and someone who appreciates quality, passionately. If you don't know someone like this imagine them - what do they look like, what's their job, what's their personality like? Talk to that person.

    Mind you this is all something I'm still working on to a very large extent.

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    Soutono Tent

    Script:

    Soutono's tents were designed by industrial designers and experts. So, not only is their design sleek and unique, but they are also water resistant and spacious. This means you get to enjoy a comfortable and enjoyable camping experience no matter what the weather is outside.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear EliTheVOXGuy's recording

    For the past 10 years, I have been a radio DJ for our local radio stations. In that position, I have voiced numerous ads and promos. I have also been an on-air talent for a local television show, and am currently the voice of our local ski resorts morning Snow Report. Despite all my experience being behind a microphone, I've just started looking for freelance work as a voice over talent, and feel I have a good amount to learn. I have built a recording studio in my home and am starting to create demos. Any feedback would be appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think this is a very polished and professional read. I can't think of anything I would change. The voice is very interesting and engaging, and I feel it is well suited for this kind of commercial copy. Great submission!

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    Spendy Mortgage Brokers

    Script:

    If money were not a factor, what would your dream house look like? Picture it now. Would it have a large wrap around porch and a lot of green space for a garden? Or would it be a modern condo in the heart of the city? Wherever your mind goes and whatever your dream consists of, Spendy Mortgage Brokers can help you get there. Come on in and speak with one of our agents today to see what we can do for you.

    59 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mahoneybill's recording

    Working on my studio.. it may be a tad echoey (sp). Am I speaking too fast? is my voice coming across well

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job! Pleasant voice! Nice pace.

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    Spotlight Video

    Script:

    DIRECTION: Looking for very catching announcer voice that's booming and also energetic and entertaining. We are a video store so theatrical would be great.

    SCRIPT: Spotlight Video 30 Second Spot

    (Voice 1) Have you been feeling a little unappreciated

    (Voice 2 Somber) yeahhh

    (Voice 1) Isn’t it about time someone did something for you?

    (Voice 2 up beat) YEAHHH!

    (Voice 1 Very upbeat) Then get down to Spotlight Video this Friday through Monday for our Customer Appreciation Weekend. We’re selling DVDs from just 1.99, Blu-Ray from just 5.99 and Spotlight Video is offering discounted movie rentals with our prepaid package! We’ll even wipe out all your late fees with any ten dollar purchase. Some restrictions may apply. Don’t miss the Savings this Friday through Monday at all Spotlight Video locations.

    58 people have played this

    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear chinook23's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked your final voice sample in this recording. The "upbeat" one. It sounded very natural. The first two, although still quite good, sounded a little pushed. Like you were trying too hard. If that makes sense. As soon as it went into the third line of Voice 1 it became very natural sounding and seemed like it was an easier voice for you to do. Keep up the good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    The read appeared a bit slow and lack luster at first, but you picked it up towards the end and I really enjoyed how your delivered the final lines.

    May want to incorporate that throughout read. Good voice and vocal variety.

    Good Luck

    Tony

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    I'm trying to challenge myself. Did it work??? Thanks! - Jim

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim,

    Yes, it worked! You were very energetic, used a bit humor, pacing and pitch were good and you use great music beds as this one fit perfect, the same as with your last script.

    As I mentioned before, you're very versatile which is an asset in this industry. What I'm seeing with you, is that you have the ability to perform multiple scripts and incorporate your own style.

    Good performance, Well done!

    Looking forward in hearing more from you.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - you did it. I enjoyed listening to it.

    Peer Feedback:

    I absolutely loved it. It was a lengthy add but you held my interest. I also appreciate that you aligned your vocal to achieve the most punch with the music. Thoroughly enjoyable. Three thumbs up. Oh, where did that come from?

    Peer Feedback:

    It was great with good pacing and emotion that kept me attentive.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great mix, well suited for the script. Very enjoyable and spot on!

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    Suzuki -- 1200 GSX

    Script:

    Turn the key. The 1200 GSX inspired 16-valve engine comes to life. The wind flows around you as you accelerate. You lean into the first turn. The rigid twin-tube diamond steel frame holds the line. And you think, go ahead life, throw me more curves. Suzuki. The ride you’ve been waiting for.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear samariassy's recording

    Looking for feedback on believability or anything else! Thanks again! :)

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    Peer Feedback:

    Quite believable! I felt like you were talking to me. Recording quality sounded fine to my ear. I didn't hear any mouth or room noise. "Rigid twin -tube diamond steel frame" is a bit staccato however it is a difficult mouthful.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Drjim777! I appreciate the feedback! :)

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    Tedford's True Value Hardware

    Script:

    Back in 1946, U.S. Navy veteran Jim Tedford started supplying the Ipswich Massachusetts and North Shore areas' lumber and building supply needs. Over the years Jim grew his business from a small sawmill to a full service lumber yard and building supply center, and in 1975 became a member of the True Value Company. Jim's store is now operated as Tedfords True Value Hardware located on Brown Square in downtown Ipswich. For contractors and "Do-It-Yourself" homeowners, Tedford's is still the source for quality lumber, building materials, hardware, tools and supplies . Tedford's has the hardware and supplies for projects of all types and sizes, and if they don't have it in stock, they can special order it for you. Tedfords not only carries the True Value brand of products but stocks national brands of lumber, building materials, paint, paint accessories, electrical supplies, and tools as well as lawn and garden supplies. Join the many North Shore homeowners and builders who rely on Tedfords True Value Hardware for the right products, expert advice, and competitive prices. Visit them online at Tedfords dot com, stop in to say hello at 10 Brown Square in Ipswich, or give them a call today.
    Tedfords True Value Hardware (978)-238-8278

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jrheckler's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Good, earnest delivery. But your pitch keeps bouncing up and down. It feels like
    it's the way your microphone is set up. I know Ipswich well. I grew up nearby.
    Have you thought of how this piece would play in Northeastern Massachusetts?
    Your slip on "Brown Street" must have escaped your attention.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear smithjakewalker's recording

    Was wondering if I might be overacting for these. Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    To be honest, I would agree that it was somewhat over the top for that spot. While the copy called for a less-than-serious tone, I feel that this reading was a bit too much in that direction. Recording and voice quality sounded great!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with you that you did over act and didn't sound natural. The quality of the recording was good and the voice was pretty good too.

    Professional Feedback:

    Hi Jake,

    Good for you for making a strong choice and taking a risk! I can hear where you're going with this humorous piece, but I'd agree it doesn't quite hit the mark. If you're going to have a parody announcer delivery like this, you need to have the clarity of speech to back it up. There were some very slurred parts-- for instance: "peopuu who tuck ah mow succsessful than peepuu who don't" We're losing a lot of "l's" and "r's", so work on making sure you hit those consonants. The other part is that I didn't feel you were talking to a listener-- it seemed you were just focusing on what your voice was doing. Even in a humorous piece you need to think about "why" you are talking that way and what it is you're trying to make your listener feel. In the case of this kind of parody announcer, you might be trying to make your listener feel inferior and uncool because they don't "tuck". Focus on your listener a bit more and I think it will organically pull the tone of this into a more balanced read.

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach September 30, 2015 at 3:48PM
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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear endives's recording

    Hi guys, thanks so much for your comments. I've tried to incorporate them into this read. Let me know your feedback. Also, I have no idea about this: Are all commercials for radio and TV 15 or 30 secs? How do I space out the 30 sec ones if the scripts don't tell me when the viewer will see images on TV in between my phrases, etc. Thanks so much!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Pace good, inflections good, but what was missing was smile. A good read. Good clarity of voice. We can hear the smile or lack of it...be happy for the money savings.

    Really...smile is important in most retail ads. Read through some of the feedback on some of the retail reads you feel are good and bad and you can begin to hear some of the critiques in your own reads after a while. I look forward to hearing more of your reads.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks-- great comment. Might try this one again.
    Does it delete your old recording if you re-record the same one?

    Thanks.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you re-submit a read from the script library, it will leave the first attempt there as well. I find it useful at times to leave the first try and then the re-do for comparison. If you go to your recording's list (in your account tab above) you can delete the first attempt if you want...you just can't replace it and leave your comments....there's some kind of limit or bug on the site that prevents us from editing once we submit something.

    Peer Feedback:

    really love the energy you give to your reads, for being new you have a confident sound and a very clear voice. Keep up the practice and we'll be hearing you on the radio soon. Some of these scripts are partial so they dont really fit :15, :30, or 1:00 timeframes. we are somewhat flying blind to what the producer would want and just have to be creative and fit the "normal" times only when it seems right.
    Look forward to hearing more

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    Timberland

    Script:

    The problem with a lot of shoes is that they don’t do the same things your feet do, like expand and contract when you take a step. Most shoes are rigid, which is why your feet hurt and get tired from walking around. Our Smart Comfort technology is a simple idea that comes right out of the way your foot works. It’s how we build our Park Trail shoe, so that it expands and flexes the way your foot does when it’s in motion. And that’s an especially good thing when you’re standing up for something you believe in. Timberland. Don’t wear it. Use it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Not concerned with recording quality. Need to know if this spot works. Got it in under :30.

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    Peer Feedback:

    James. I liked the informal conversational quality to your read. I thought it was a bit nasal but it was OK. Also you didn't give proper emphasis on The Park Trail Shoe. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read JAmes. Sounded like a good endorsment for the product with a good "feel" and casual delivery. Good job. You should edit the breathes out, it doesnt take anything away from the read to do so, and it helps with polishing up the final product. Would you submit this with the breathes in on an audition?

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    TJ Maxx

    Script:

    Sometimes clothes express how you feel. Sometimes, they determine it. Fashion. Some people get it. Some get it for less. T.J. Maxx.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear scdawe's recording

    This is my first submission to the feedback forum so I chose a script from the practice script library. Any comments would be greatly appreciated! Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice clear voice! Audio sounds echoey. You may need some acoustic material to insulate your area. Otherwise great job!

    Peer Feedback:

    There is an echo in the room so it did not sound so professional. Also, I would say to speed it up a bit.

    Peer Feedback:

    I can hear echoes in your recording. Perhaps try treating your recording space if you can afford to.

    Peer Feedback:

    Scdawe hbi there ! We have some pretty fine tuned ears in here eh ? Yes it bounced back on you, as though you were in a hall way. No worries, those are technical issues you can handle with ease. Actually if you want to describe your recording area, ( size, where, what's in or not in the room) some of those great ears can give direct advice I bet. Audio panels are pretty cheap, if hung properly they will "kill" much". I'm still getting my former radio room turned around myself.
    Performance: I thought you were clear, natural and on point. I liked the "some get it for less....leading lil smile, smirk...) nice pause moment.. ah I save a bundle you know ? My 2 cents. Keep up ! SC

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for the feedback! I'll get to work on that echo and hopefully do better on the next one!

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    Various Scripts

    Script:

    Ring | Video Doorbell-
    Your home is precious. It’s a sanctuary. An escape. A place to play and grow.
    Protect your home wherever you are with mobile video monitoring from RING.
    Find out more at ring.com

    SONOS-
    Get the home theatre experience for music lovers that’s simple to set up and easy to enjoy. Fill your home with cinematic sound when the TV is on and all the music you love when it’s off. Get SONOS home theatre and transform your living room into the front row. SONOS the home sound system

    Hilton Hotels & Resort-
    Why wait months for your next vacation when you can squeeze one in between Friday and Monday at Hilton. There’s a vacation at the end of every week. Whatever type of weekender you are don’t let another weekend pass you by. Now get 10% off weekends or get 15% off when you book direct at hilton.com

    Humane Society
    Up to 6 million homeless animals enter shelters nationwide every year. Some abandoned, some sick or injured they’re just looking for a place to call home. When you rescue a shelter animal you won’t just be making a difference in their life, you could be making a difference in your own. Visit your local animal shelter today and save a life.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Kenneths's recording

    Hi all... starting my commercial demo practice.... man is commercial hard! Anyhow starting out working on these scripts with my coach. Any thoughts on interpretation and performance would be greatly appreciated. Thank you! Kenneth

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Kenneth.
    I always enjoy your performances. Love your voice and the way you work the mic. I recently watched a Bill DeWees video about adding dynamics to a read. He explains and demonstrates this well. The main point is that performances shouldn't sound monochromatic. There are several shifts within a commercial script and you should not only recognize these but make a small shift in your delivery as well. Subtle changes, of course. In his demonstration, he says imagine three different people for your audience. Three people you know. When you reach the transition in the script, imagine your listener changes to the next person in that group. Your delivery will change ever so slightly too. Now, take the Humane Society script in your demo. The first two sentences would be for one listener; the third sentence would be for another; and the fourth sentence would be for the last listener. This follows the problem, solution, call-to-action arrangement of the script. Give it a try. Your performance of this script is monochromatic now, meaning there's no change from one section to the next. I think seeing it as having three parts would help you improve it. Otherwise, I think you should include at least one piece that shows a different voice, if possible. All of these are that cool, low volume, close-mic, breathy style. I really like that, but can you do a more supported, slightly louder, clear delivery too. More next-door neighbor or buddy style? You don't want the overall demo to be monochromatic; show them a range of styles and emotions. What you do, you do exceptionally well! Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great reads, excellent pacing, and clarity.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bill this is the exact feedback I need as it is the feeling I am having working through adding dynamics to my reads. I can listen to other working voiceover talent and hear exactly what you are saying would be helpful for me but have such a hard time achieving it. I know Bill DeWees's work and just found the video you mentioned - Improve Your Voice Over Reads in 3 Minutes - and will be given it a thorough listen. Thanks as always for your insightful feedback and generosity... now back into the sound closet for me!

    Best!

    Kenneth

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice, but I agree with the others ... a little variety would surely spice up the recording and you have it in you ... you know you do! Diana

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    Visions Solarian Flooring

    Script:

    It’s the look you’re looking for. Your own unique style. Visions Solarian allows you to combine color to create borders, stripes, insets, accents, and more. Unlimited options can make your room brighter, more colorful, more interesting, and more personal. See for yourself. Call 1-800 233-3823 for your nearest Armstrong Floor Fashion Center retailer.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Nathaniel Davis's recording

    Just tried this copy again on my new mic; sped it up a bit, tried to be a bit more animated. Let me know what you think, thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your mic sounds good, your read is also very good. You have a solidly marketable voice. One small observation, your "S"s seem a bit harsh. I experience a similar problem, mine is mostly due to the fact that I currently have braces on my teeth, (occasionally it causes my "S"s to whistle.) Here are some vocal exercises/techniques to de-ess your voice I found on a voiceover forum, they work for me. "The more worried or tense you are the tighter your voice will become, the tighter your mouth and tongue are and thus it becomes more sibilant - so suggest you yawn before you start and open your mouth a little more, as well as a workout with some tongue twisters to warm up - as the tongue can't make such a protracted sssss if it has further to travel."

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice overall. You might want to give a little more variance to the reading of the list of "borders, stripes, insets, accents, and more" to give it more personality. Nice smile to the delivery. It is a little bright in the upper range.

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    VW Ballard

    Script:

    Take 1 -

    (vinyl crackle & pops FX) This commercial has been recorded and played back from vinyl just so you can hear it, Ballard. Your taste is timeless, and that’s why Carter Volkswagen has sold your car of choice for more than 60 years. Test drive a Jetta at Ballard’s Carter Volkswagen. 15 minutes from downtown, 10 minutes from Capitol Hill, and 5 minutes from normal.

    Take 2 -

    Thinking Ballard was cool before it was cool, was cool. Until it became cool. Ballard, you know cool, and that’s why Carter Volkswagen has sold your car of choice for more than 60 years. Test drive a Jetta at Ballard’s Carter Volkswagen. 15 minutes from downtown, 10 minutes from Greenlake, and 5 minutes from normal.

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    The client's instructions were, "This is a straight read, but the delivery is a playful tribute at the quirkiness of the target." Please let me know what you think as I'm new to VO. Thanks!

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    I am also new to this...I think the recording quality is excellent, and the way that you put the quirkiness in the read was good, you did it with a wink. I would be a bit confused about the inflection that was in the word "COOL" but you did a good job.

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    A good read in general. There were some choppy spots. The "personality" used was good. The watermarks are annoying, I don't think you need to worry about ppl stealing recordings here or even on sites like voices.com. Ppl will actually stop listening to your work IMO.

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    Thanks guys for the honest critiques. It's a big help.

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    I really liked your interpretation of the script! However, the read was way too fast. Also, there was still a lot of mouth noise and breaths that need to be edited out. Really nice delivery, though -other than the speed.

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    I liked the energy in your read as it really makes you sound believable. I did hear a couple of plosives or peak distortions that can be easily fixed by using a pop filter and you could also try talking slightly off axis into your microphone.(in other words, when you're facing directly towards the mic, turn your head slightly left or right so that the air coming out of your mouth doesn't directly hit the mic. See if that help! :)

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    Whirlpool Dishwasher

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    (dreamy, fantastical) Imagine a dishwasher from whirlpool that creates new space, with more room for more dishes. Now pots & pans are no problem. The tall tub dishwasher from Whirlpool. Clean more than you ever thought possible. Whirlpool. Just imagine.

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    Feedback on being dreamy and fantastical as indicated as well as anything else. Thanks! :)

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    Your pacing is on point, and towards the end of the recording you add some of "dreamy/fantastical" inflection. I think adding more to the beginning of the recording that conveys excitement could be helpful!

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    Thank you Nazzy for your feedback! Much appreciated! :)

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    Hi Samariassy,
    Thank you for your feedback on my demo! I liked your read for Whirlpool I thought the pacing was good and your words are very clear. I agree the other comment though that it needs to be a little more animated as if all your prayers have been answered by this dishwasher, staying within the context of dreamy/fantasy as the direction says. Hope that helps!
    Take care...

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    Thank you, Jim! I appreciate your feedback! :)

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    Whirlpool Dishwasher

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    (dreamy, fantastical) Imagine a dishwasher from whirlpool that creates new space, with more room for more dishes. Now pots & pans are no problem. The tall tub dishwasher from Whirlpool. Clean more than you ever thought possible. Whirlpool. Just imagine.

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    Very pretty voice! Nice pacing, flow and and sounded pleasant! Great job!!

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    I highly appreciate this voice recording. Keep sharing...

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    I highly appreciate this audio recording. Keep Sharing
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    Touzet -
    nice read, as expected.
    sorry I don't have more to say.

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    X-Ray Vision - Samsung Family Hub Refrigerator at Lowes

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    Specifications: Character voice for toy superhero doll laying on floor in front of new Samsung Internet connected refrigerator. 30 second spot with announcer outgoing at the end. Character section will take 24 seconds with the outgoing voice taking 6 seconds. Timing would be critical.

    Script: (Scene setting: Superhero doll on the floor facing new refrigerator, “Sally” will be visible in another room but not in kitchen.)

    Hero: “Carrots, last night’s pepperoni pizza, an avocado.

    Yeah, I’ve got x-ray vision, but so does Sally here...because she went to Lowe’s and got the Samsung Family Hub Refrigerator. It has three built-in cameras that link to her smartphone. So she can always see which groceries she needs.

    AWWW GEEZ, BARRY...PUT SOME PANTS ON!!!

    …..I can’t un-see that.

    Announcer: Now get up to 30% off select major appliances $396 (read “three ninety-six”) or more at Lowes.

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    Great copy interpretation! Full of energy and humor, very animated but not too over the top. The only thing I suggest is to try to maintain that connection and energy a bit more during the description of the refrigerator -- not the most exciting part of the script, so it loses a tad bit of energy/connection there.

    Recording is pretty good. Clear and free of background noise.

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    1-800-PET-MEDS

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    Where do you get your pets flea, tick and heartworm medications? 1-800-PET-MEDS guarantees the lowest price on all your pets medications. Order now and receive free shipping. Call 1-800-PET-MEDS.

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    7-11

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    So its two in the morning and you're starving
    Nothing in the fridge and nothing in the cupboards
    you don't even have dog biscuits hanging around
    You think about cooking, but then you remember the three alarm fires you started the last time you tried using the stove
    Well check out 7/11, Theres gotta be one right near Ya'
    They have everything from burgers to tacos, 24hrs a day, seven days a week
    7/11! Think of it as your own personal walk in kitchen

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    7-11

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    So its two in the morning and you're starving
    Nothing in the fridge and nothing in the cupboards
    you don't even have dog biscuits hanging around
    You think about cooking, but then you remember the three alarm fires you started the last time you tried using the stove
    Well check out 7/11, Theres gotta be one right near Ya'
    They have everything from burgers to tacos, 24hrs a day, seven days a week
    7/11! Think of it as your own personal walk in kitchen

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    A&C Diamonds (Classy, Intimate)

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    What makes a gift...unforgettable? What makes a single moment...a lifetime memory? The answer lies in the distinctive and eclectic collections at A & C Diamonds in Savannah. The timeless treasures that adorn life's hallmark moments should never be purchased in haste. Nor should the search for a cherished gift be left to chance.

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    Ace

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    Ace Brand lawn and garden supplies are made with a satisfaction guarantee. Because all the talk in the world doesn’t matter if you can’t back it up. Ace Brand.

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    Ace Brand

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    Ace Brand lawn and garden supplies are made with a satisfaction guarantee. Because all the talk in the world doesn’t matter if you can’t back it up. Ace Brand.

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    Adidas Sl Hoops At Champs

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    The new SL Hoops from Adidas. Where sport and style become one. July 25. Only at Champs Sports. Where sport lives.

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    AirWick

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    Relaxes like a back massage, but costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. We could all use a little break. That’s why AirWick designed a range of aromatherapy products with a unique blend of essential oils that will revitalize your spirits. AirWick. It’s good to be home.

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    AirWick

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    Relaxes like a back massage, but costs a lot less and lasts a lot longer. We could all use a little break. That’s why AirWick designed a range of aromatherapy products with a unique blend of essential oils that will revitalize your spirits. AirWick. It’s good to be home.

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    Alamo Rent a car

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    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky.

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    Albertson's

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    Albertson's has everything you need, every day. The freshest food at low Albertson's prices. And right now you can save even more during our huge anniversary sale.Get selected varieties of Gatorade, 8=pack, 20 ounce bottles 3.99 each when you buy 5, plus selected varieties of Quaker Chewy Bars or Dibbs, 5 to8 count, 1.49 each when you buy 5. Mix or match. Albertson's huge anniversary sale. It's just better!

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    Albertson's Take 2

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    Albertson's has everything you need, every day. The freshest food at low Albertson's prices. And right now you can save even more during our huge anniversary sale.Get selected varieties of Gatorade, 8=pack, 20 ounce bottles 3.99 each when you buy 5, plus selected varieties of Quaker Chewy Bars or Dibbs, 5 to8 count, 1.49 each when you buy 5. Mix or match. Albertson's huge anniversary sale. It's just better!

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    American Express - Realise The Potential

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    Day and Night, we make things happen.
    We've helped celebrate forgotten anniversaries.
    Found tired travellers a bed.
    All over the world, we've gone above and beyond, 24/7..
    We personally delivered replacement cards.
    Found doctors who speak your language..
    We've tracked down lost wedding dresses..
    Turned 3 Star into a Million Star dining.
    We've even returned a loved one home.
    Impossible...Nah!
    Does this sound like the service you get from your card?
    American Express. Realise the potential.

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    American Tire Supply

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    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    American Tire Supply

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    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    American Tire Supply

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    Free. Now when’s the last time ya’ heard that? A while...right? Well at American Tire Supply, when you buy one all-weather radial tire, you get another one free! Plus, get a free alignment! Hey, with a deal like this, how can you NOT afford to visit. So hurry on down to your local American Tire Supply, where you can still hear the word free. Subject to dealer participation.

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    Amoco Certicare

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    Amoco knows how busy you are. We know there’s never enough time in your day. We know it’s not always convenient to get your car repaired. So Certicare will now fix your car at night -- while you’re asleep. New “Service While You Sleep.” Just call 1-800-4-REPAIR. That’s 1-800-4-REPAIR. Certicare’s “Service While You Sleep.” Only at participating Amoco dealers.

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    Amoco Certicare

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    Amoco knows how busy you are. We know there’s never enough time in your day. We know it’s not always convenient to get your car repaired. So Certicare will now fix your car at night -- while you’re asleep. New “Service While You Sleep.” Just call 1-800-4-REPAIR. That’s 1-800-4-REPAIR. Certicare’s “Service While You Sleep.” Only at participating Amoco dealers

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    Amoco Ultimate

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    Crystal clear gasoline, for cars that benefit from Premium Gasoline. Amoco Ultimate. You should expect more from a leader.

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    Amoco Ultimate 2

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    You are nobody’s fool, you weren’t born yesterday, you didn’t come down with the rain, and you most definitely did not fall off the back of the turnip truck. No sir, you are one smart cookie, especially when it comes to your car; you know your correct tire pressure, you can find your own dip stick, thank you! And of course, you demand Amoco Ultimate premium gasoline, because you know that your car maker recommends a premium like Ultimate for optimum performance. Are you omniscient? Possessed of a higher intelligence?

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    Animal Health

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    He makes you laugh. Actually likes snuggling. And never channel surfs. Doesn’t he deserve a little extra attention from you? Each year, dogs of all ages, breeds, and sizes develop arthritis. So pay close attention to yours. If you notice a loss of mobility or energy level after normal activity, find out how Rimadyl has helped nearly one million dogs with arthritis put quality of life ahead of their pain.

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    Ann Taylor Loft

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    The perfect gift starts with love. For family, friends, colleagues, for everyone who really matters in your life. Ann Taylor loft.

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    Antolini Prescioustone

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    When it comes to innovation in natural stone, one company stands alone: Antolini. The result is the Precioustone Collection. Over 100 unique creations, unrivalled for their artful beauty and exquisite quality. Setting the standard for Italian craftsmanship. And now, this collection is available throughout the US. Locate your nearest Precioustone distributor at antoliniprecioustone.com. Antolini. Bringing Stone to Life.

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    Apple Computers

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    Apple

    At Apple, we design our computers specifically for the needs of education.

    We design them to be powerful enough to prepare high school students for the technology they’ll encounter in the future. Yet we also design them to be easy enough for a first grader to use.

    We design our computers to run all of the Macintosh programs schools are already using; and we design them to run a whole new family of enhanced software that makes graphics, video and animation even more life-like and exciting.

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    Apple iPod

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    Presenting iPod. The first MP3 player to pack a mind-blowing 1,000 songs and a 10-hour battery into a stunning 6.5-ounce package you can literally take everywhere. But iPod isn't just a revolution in portability, it's also a revolution in simplicity. Just plug into your Mac and all of your iTunes songs and playlists are automatically downloaded into iPod at blazing FireWire speed. With iPod, it's that easy to take your entire music collection with you wherever you go, in the pocket of your choice. Get your iPod at The Wiz, Circuit City, or Best Buys

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    AquaSpa

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    Slip into a hydrotherapy bath or melt under a reflexology massage. Be pampered by AquaSpa, the most luxurious spa at sea.. And to all of life’s little tensions, say bon voyage. For reservations, call your travel agent or 1-800-CELEBRITY.

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    Aquos By Sharp

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    Introducing Aquos, inspiring flat panel, liquid crystal television. Crystal-clear image quality. Outstanding brightness. And a screen that’s merely 2.5 inches thin. Aquos by Sharp. It’s what TV will be.

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    Armstrong Floors

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    It’s the look you’re looking for. Your own unique style. Visions Solarian allows you to combine color to create borders, stripes, insets, accents. Unlimited options can make your room brighter, more colorful, more interesting, more personal. See for yourself. Call 1-800 233-3823 for your nearest Armstrong Floor Fashion Center retailer.

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    Audio Associates

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    Listen... What do you hear? Nothing. No noise ... digital audio purity. The new digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic will change the way you listen to music. Now listen… What do you hear? Every nuance … crystal clear … like it was meant to sound. So sit down, relax, close your eyes, and get ready for the digital enhanced audio systems from Panasonic. Only at AUDIO ASSOCIATES... there’s no mistaking our sound.

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    Audio-One

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    So you finally get that humongous TV with the man-eating speakers that apparently goes with your other twelve blinking boxes. Now where the heck are you gonna put them? No one puts the home in home theater like Audio-One. There’s a sale on now!

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    Auto Source

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    The Hartford Courant’s got a great new way to shop for a used car. It’s AutoSource ... Connecticut’s used car hotline. Call 522-AUTO from anywhere, anytime, and shop for a used car by make, model, budget, and options. It’s easy. Simply call 522-AUTO and follow the prompts. Auto Source ... Connecticut’s used car hotline. All you need to shop for a great used car.

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    Automated Phone Voice System

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    Automated Phone Voice System
    All of our operators are currently assisting other customers. Please stay on the line—one of our representatives will be with you shortly. Please make sure you have your account number ready so that we may better assist you. This call may be monitored for quality assurance.

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    Ballroom Jeans

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    Off-the-Clock Ballroom® Jeans
    The tools are stowed, the truck is loaded and you’re ready to motor on home. That doesn’t mean you’re ready to speak in a higher octave, though. You still need room downstairs after the workday is done. You need the freedom that only Ballroom® Jeans can provide – in your off-hours too. They’re casual looking, but with dressier details suitable for heading into town or taking the missus out to dinner. Ballroom® Jeans. For Work and Beyond.

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    Ballroom Jeans - Duluth Trading Company

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    John P. from Ohio said, “I like how you designed your jeans without the cheap hotel syndrome (no ballroom).” So we started to call ‘em Ballroom Jeans and the rest is history! The built-in crotch gusset makes crouching, climbing, all kinds of gyrations possible with more comfort. Crouch without the Ouch. Ballroom Jeans. From the Duluth Trading Company.

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    Baltimore Haystack

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    This, is Baltimore.

    A humble city on the harbor.

    A city of skill, and talent.

    A place that doesn’t care where you’re from; only who you are, and where you’re going.

    A city that runs strong, and stays true.

    A town of good neighbors. Hard workers. And high achievers.

    A city of patriots and progressives.

    This, is what we’re made of.

    And now, we lean forward once more. To make our streets a little simpler. A little cleaner. And a little greener.

    We’re Canton neighbors, on a mission for a smarter city.

    This is Baltimore.

    And this, is Haystack.

    Sounds Like...
    Confident And Genuine

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