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Script Genres > English Adult > Commercial > Transportation

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    2014 Buick Enclave
    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center air bag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.
    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

    113 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100907/script-recording-78991.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    The sound seems pretty live and distant. And your read was a bit over the top, and didn't seem to focus on the point of the ad. There were some pronunciation issues too (intellilink) The last line was perfect, I thought.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your strong, confident voice and accent, overall a convincing presentation. Some heavy breathing stops but maybe that can be edited out, I don't know. some minor issues:
    - you put a glottal stop between to and 8, better not I think
    - you seemed to say with instead of when right at the beginning.
    - intellilink pronounced as interlink.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you should tighten up the pacing and get this in at :30. Some of the gaps seemed too long.
    You missed on the feature "Intellilink" - you said "Interlink"....that's a no-no.

    a little bit of regional or urban accent - but that's not necessarily a bad thing. Depends on what the client wants.

    also, you have a noisy recording space, especially with respect to the strength of your voice. You'll need a nice treated booth or closet to knock down the echo.

    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    It feels a little forced to me. Perhaps smooth it out and make it a little more natural? As if you're speaking to someone?

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center air bag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.
    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

    113 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mrwolfe's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-114443/script-recording-90794.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Mrwolfe. I do enjoy the quality of your voice. A couple of things to work on - there are some missing T's in your recording when it appears at the end of words, like right, can't, first - the 3rd sentence needs some more flow to it, it feels like it's over a couple of different times at sound system and air bag - got a pretty good plosive P on perfect, be careful with those. Keep at the practice!

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center airbag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.

    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

    65 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear reteo's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-3086/script-recording-96279.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds really good to me. A few breaths are a bit prominent. I would not necessarily remove them althogether, but at least make them quieter.

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    2014 Buick Enclave
    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center air bag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.
    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

    52 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear robinss@bellsouth.net's recording

    This is my second upload. I'm still very new, but would like feedback on my V.O. skills. I feel like I may have sounded rushed in the middle. Thank you!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-132328/script-recording-99661.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You said it yourself, it seemed a little rushed but otherwise it was pretty good.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like how the read sounded relaxed at the beginning and end. You are right, the middle is a bit rushed, but I think you were trying to get in all the information. However, this sounds like it could be a TV spot, so the screen would probably be showing each feature that you are listing off and would need more than a second to show it. I would slow this part down, as it really has the "meat" of the read. Buick probably wants the audience to remember these cool special features, so I would really take my time on those features and make them sound irresistible. I think your voice is a good match for this commercial, keep up the good work! P.S. I am still new too!

    Peer Feedback:

    mikep1 and gspiehler, thank you both for your comments. Very helpful!

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    2014 E Class

    Script:

    A car that can see like a human
    Using stereoscopic cameras, and even stop itself if it has to.
    The technology may be hard to imaging, but why you would want it, is not.
    The 2014 E Class
    It doesn't just see the future, it is the future.

    88 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mkvo's recording

    20 year radio vet who's very new to the world of voice over. Trying to find my conversational read and break 20 years of radio habits that don't always translate. Thanks for any feedback you can provide!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-103944/script-recording-82408.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    You obviously recognize the "radio habit" problem that is definitely difficult to break. I'm hearing an announcer quality delivery but not conversational. I'm hearing a radio guy reading the words in a slightly choppy flow.

    When I do an imitation of a radio voice, it's a put-on thing that I definitely don't do in casual, person-to-person conversation. Do you not also do the same once you enter a radio broadcast booth? Do you not then go into "on-air mode" and "do the voice" for the radio audience? Or has all that time at the mic seeped into your everyday conversational sound? If it's the first and not the latter...abandon that training in order to speak more at-ease and conversationally.

    One of the first friends I made here on the forum was a former radio guy. He admitted that it was really hard for him to get away from that tendency...but he was able to and make some very natural sounding recordings.

    You have a very clear delivery for sure. But for a brand like Mercedes...sophisticated and elegant is the key. You mention in your words that you're new to voice over. Consider also that we are called voice ACTORS...and this would be an instance where that second description would make sense. Imagine the video that would accompany this script...imagine the upscale clientele who will be paying attention with the idea that this super expensive automobile will fit just right into their upscale existence. "Smiley announcer guy" isn't the voice that goes with this.

    Good luck. Oh...heard something in the sound...can't say it's "room", but there's a low level "ringing" or something there throughout.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Going to be a challenge to kick the radio guy habit and move toward "conversational" VO.

    The first point is that you're more familiar with that faceless audience - to paraphrase "Sunset Boulevard", all those masses out there in radio land. Whereas the "conversational" touch is to reach that one person rather than a multitude.

    So picture yourself talking to a friend or relative on the phone or over a cup of coffee in a crowed diner and you want only them to hear you. It's intimate rather than broadcast, kind of what FM radio was back in the 70's.

    Also, your internal (radio broadcast) clock put this at 15 seconds. Maybe. But it seems a tad rushed to be considered "conversational". Give yourself a little more leeway as you might picture the the car and its features being put through their paces in your mind's eye as TxTom suggested with his comment about visualizing the video that might accompany the VO.

    Bravo for catching the typo in the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback guys. The advice about visualization is great. As I listen back a day later I hear the radio in the read.

    Peer Feedback:

    The "next day listen" is something I've called "second day regret" in the past. It seems to be common amongst newbs and those with lots of experience at times.

    Peer Feedback:

    I've certainly heard more radio in reads, so keep working it!

    I def like the direction to be more polished for this piece -that may help you smooth out your choppy delivery by giving a little Maurice LaMarche (Lexus commercials -but more importantly The Brain) to your read.

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    A1 Auto Body

    Script:

    A1 Auto Body

    Everybody out there is always saying how they can’t find a job ….blah blah blah…Well here’s your chance…a1-auto body works wants to talk to you, if you have experience in body work or auto repair. A1 is looking to hire a class A body technician and a reliable class B mechanic. The pay is great, and there’s a full benefits package for qualified people. You couldn’t ask for nicer people to work for or better working conditions. Because a1 has state of the art equipment…….

    92 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear drelamar8's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-100907/script-recording-79376.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have the best "ears" for tech comments, but even I can hear how hard the space you are in is. Really echo's. Get some soft stuff around quick. You seem quite far from the mic so maybe just getting within 6 - 8" will make a big difference.

    Also it sounds like a really RAW take. Maybe that's what you intended.. If so OK, but I would like to hear it a little warmer. Some compression and maybe a little EQ perhaps. Being closer to the mic will definitely add some low end.

    As far as the read, you didn't sound to me like you were talking to me. You need to talk to a one person audience. I never got that personal level of connection as a listener that you were talking to me, not just reading to a microphone.

    My latest gimmick is to keep the web can on me and in a corner of the monitor have it open so I can at least talk to myself. Hard to do and read at the same time, but seems to help some. At least it is a constant reminder to SMILE, which is always important. Some people can get by with a picture of someone. I find the web cam works better for me.

    Peer Feedback:

    I have to agree with Tom. It sounded like you were in an echo chamber and far from the mic. I couldn't say that you did or didn't sound like you were talking to me. The noise was too distracting. I think you have a good voice for this. Fix the tech issues and I bet you do much better.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jessgaylor's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-64539/script-recording-62089.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jess,
    Your voice is pleasant but could be more present in the read. If this were a PSA I'd say great job but this isn't. This is a sales ad. You are selling "Clarity. Sophistication. Simplicity." Communicate that. Then the benefits, "Watch movies, play games or access your music library." There is also humor injected into the mix "ejection seat not included." That is a comedic punchline that needs more vocalization than a PSA type delivery. As delivered the joke falls flat. You read well but when you do a script you have to ask yourself, "Who is my audience, and what am I trying to communicate to them. Then you have to decide how you are going to accomplish that vocally. Anybody can read. It's what you do with the script that will set you apart from the rest.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jess,

    I love your voice! It comes off as kind and genuine. The music that you chose was great and really suited the script. In the beginning your voice sounded a little too low, you also needed to color the words, "Quality, Clarity, Sophistication, Simplicity" You want to draw in the listener, not let them struggle to hear what you are saying. You needed to be more conversational, it sounded a little like you were announcing. I agree with what Richurd said too. I am still learning myself and love all of the awesome critiques from everybody. Thanks again for your critique, have a great night!

    I wish you the best of luck with everything!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    Acura- SLX Script

    Script:

    It’s taking a deserted road by surprise. It’s the one-touch four-wheel drive that can take you to more remote regions than public television. It’s leaving civilization behind without leaving civilization behind. It’s the Acura SLX. The true definition of luxury. Yours.

    52 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimsong56's recording

    This is my first submission. My work with my coach in prep for recording my first demo in two weeks is working with my on self-direction, car ads style, and utiliyzing my lower register. I recorded on TwistedWave on my Ipad. Next week I will have a new mic. This is a raw recording. Looking for feedback on my style, speed, and variety in my modulation and what mood I am conveying. Intention is to be playful.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-86674/script-recording-71068.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hy
    Don't know where to start ! Ok may I ask who is the coach that said "you have to record your demo in two weeks (or suggested)? I really want to know. Second since you are working with a coach on your demo, how come your focusing on self direction? I think your coach should direct you in the right way specially if this is your first demo!!! (self direction comes when we learn to read copy, and understand the advanced basics of VO ) That's why we all shell out big bucks, to have an expert opinion and help from someone who made it already in the business . And IS able to guide us in the right direction. Your sound is there and i'm not trying to discourage you in any way or shape.
    The copy : I leave this one to james or any volunteer whos up for it.
    All the best
    Regards
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    My intention is to have feedback on performance only. Guess I was not clear. I was asked to WORK ON SELF DIRECTION for the next two weeks.

    Demo is in the future and indeed I have work to do.

    Working on 'self direction" on a new piece helps me to prepare for audition situations.

    Thank you all.

    Peer Feedback:

    Alright, since Balazs mentioned my name, I'll chime in.

    Self-direction, even for seasoned veterans (and I am far from it), is challenging and can be problematic. A lot of it has to do with a certain objectivity - being able to step back, listen to yourself (you delivery, inflections, and all of the other technique and technical stuff) and analyze what is positive and negative with the finished product. Can it be improved? (Maybe with just a punch-in of a certain word that sounded a little funky - or tightening up the flow so that it sounds a little more "conversational".)

    That said, there is more of a subjective element. A lot of that happens on this Forum and out there in the casting/client world. To paraphrase. "I don't know anything about art, but I know what I like." You're going to find complementary and contradictory opinions (2c's) on here and out there, even on the same read. But, fundamentally (unless they've never turned on a TV or radio), the average listener (audience) can discern (from a gut feeling) if what they're hearing (from a VO) is "good" or "bad". Bottom line: It's never going to be "perfect" and not everyone will like it. So, we strive to be the best we know how to be and count on that more of the people who make the hiring decisions "like" what we do than not and that those people will hire us.

    So much for philosophy. On tho the read. And, again, this is only my 2c. Take what you can use and discard the rest.

    The attitude is good, but the pace is too slow. Since this is an ad for a more upscale car, a superior-type attitude works - almost verging on snarky, but not quite. So, you might push that envelope just a touch further.

    You took a lot of (slight) pauses in the middle of sentences - especially in the first two. It slows down the message and breaks up the thoughts. What I'm hearing is "technique". You're emphasizing all of the right things, but too caught up in that rather than relating to me what you want me to picture. There is a certain "deliberateness" to the read. Did you think of coming into the copy by answering a pre-question that someone may have asked? For instance, if I were to ask, "What's so special about this car that sets it apart for any other luxury car?" The rest of the copy is an answer to that question - or I might have had even more questions interjected in between your lines. Imagine those questions in there without leaving big gaps for your responses (the copy) to keep the message tight.

    The second half of the second sentence got a little swoopy in inflection. You stressed the important stuff (at the beginning). I would suggest that the rest is that snarky toss-away - "This car can take you to more places than PBS ever could, you lattte-sipping, arugula-eating twit! So, get off the couch and get behind the wheel!"

    The third sentence is the big challenge.

    c.moore tackled this copy a few days ago, and I'll copy something I wrote to him:
    ___________________

    There's an acting technique where, if there are repeated words (in the same sentence or close together in the same thought or paragraph) to avoid emphasizing the same word twice to twist the emphasis elsewhere. The example here is: "It’s leaving civilization behind without leaving civilization behind." I heard "leaving" more or less stressed both times - with other words just being "punched", which sounded a bit unnatural. There are several other possible interpretations: "It’s leaving civilization BEHIND without leaving CIVILIZATION behind." or "It’s leaving CIVILIZATION behind without leaving civilization BEHIND." or "It’s LEAVING civilization BEHIND without leaving CIVILIZATION behind." or "It’s leaving civilization behind WITHOUT leaving civilization BEHIND." There are many other combinations as well, and in an audition (or actual recording) situation you may be asked to come up with a few possibilities for their consideration.
    _______________________

    In your case, you emphasized "behind" both times. You really have to dig into that sentence and find the message that works in the context of the rest of your interpretation, without being repetitive.

    And you really need to close the lid on the package with the end. Convince me that this is the only car for me. There's a "smile" in here, kinda. It's that superior, knowing smile - the "C'mon, you know you want it." kind of smile.

    There's a good foundation here. But I do somewhat agree with Balazs that you don't want to jump into doing the demo by simply giving yourself a deadline. Practicing self-direction is a very good thing, but having that other set of ears (whether it's your coach or others on this Forum) to help you to hone the skills and guide (or direct) you with script breakdown and interpretation can't hurt and may get you to a more polished product (demo).

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you. All good comments. I loved your discerning of "leaving civilization behind..." ideas. I will give them a go this week and listen to other interpretations as well as do another take. Your input is appreciated.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Lonnie James's recording

    I'am a Newbe.I notice after I post the clip that I have a problem with reading the wrong words in the clip.Please forgive me.I'am working every day trying to fix the problem.Thank you for the feedback

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-1427/script-recording-29235.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Before I comment, I would ask what you think the target audience for this clip would be.

    Peer Feedback:

    really crisp and rich production - I really like it. What's your setup?
    Clearly an urban read. IMHO well done. Like a commercial on a smooth jazz radio station.
    Let's hear more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Damn,, I was going for Incompetently Unconscious,,, now you tell me...

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    ALAMO CAR RENTAL

    Script:

    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky

    48 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Redux. I increased the tempo and tried to make it more human.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Alamo2-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    James, you rolled right through all the punctuation!!

    If I were to give any direction on this it would be to give it some whimsey...some thoughtful imagery. Slow down!! 22s for a 30s spot? Relax!

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree James. It seemed more like an express train than a car commercial to me. You probably had a good reason for doing this but taking 8 secs off a 30 sec spot!!.Relax is the word! Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm just going to consider this a strike-out and move on. I couldn't make up my mind about the delivery here. I banged this one out last night after getting home from a very fun and productive on-camera commercial class. (Y'know, maybe music might have helped. Weird, though. I have been to Durango and driven that stretch of road and, but I think I a Budget rental.)

    I think I mentioned this to one or more of you guys and gals before, but don't feel that you need to handle me with kid gloves. I'm a big boy, and your pointed critiques can only push me to get better at this and, hopefully, secure me a payday sometime soon. So keep it coming. Challenge me to be competitive.

    I really would like to contact some of you directly. Hopefully David Goldberg will address this when they re-do the site.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,
    Tom is right. 8 seconds is a very comfortable margin. You can slow down and concentrate on inflection and pausing. You barreled through periods and comas like they weren't even there. Never bang them out. When you do you disrespect your audience. I know I've been creamed whenever I've done it. People come to expect a certain level of quality from you and they will accept nothing less than your best. If you don't give the script it's due you will get do do in return. How's that for harsh criticism?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks guys. The odd thing is, I think doing this stuff is actually making me a better on-camera commercial actor because I'm actually talking to people (well, the camera anyway and the people around it) instead of that cold microphone that ain't givin' me nothin' back! Just have to flex my imagination muscles a bit more. I have another audition tomorrow. Wish me luck.

    Richurd - Harsh but helpful.
    Brian - Caustic but constructive
    Tom - Tough but thorough
    Arlen - Accented but not Ausie (sorry, couldn't resist)

    Peer Feedback:

    Accent? What accent?

    Peer Feedback:

    Aww...I wanted "constructive." LOL

    Peer Feedback:

    I was trying to be alliterative, you lunkheads! Shesh!

    Peer Feedback:

    Well James...you've been critiqued by some top notch pros....but here's my take. You have a TERRIFIC voice for this business and I think that commercials would work well for you. I totally agree with the comments about pacing. You need to "enjoy" and "believe" what you're saying...it's coming off too fast and impersonal. I love hearing Sam Elliot doing reads like this. Remember, you're setting is Colorado....not Boston or NYC...it's got to be laid back and a little sultry. Thanks for sharing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Top notch pros? Me? Marianna, you haven't heard my work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Not true Arlen....love your stufff....just too shy to tell you! LOL. You are right up there with the pros!

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    Alamo Car Rental

    Script:

    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Alright, I couldn't help myself. Take 3. One more time, with feeling.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Alamo3-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    That's brilliant James. I can hear that smile in your voice. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Makes me want to rent a car and go driving in CO. Recording sounds top notch. Great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    More relaxed, gave more respect to the punctuation. Best one you've done of this read.

    Peer Feedback:

    You swapped the words "silver" and "gold". I don't know how critical that would be to a potential client. Other than that, sounded great. You had that nice Western twang. You might be the next Sam Elliot.

    Peer Feedback:

    The overall reading is really effective. You have imagination and a sense of trust. Be careful to keep up your energy when you say "one million miles". The ending needs a little cap to your wryness. How about a slight dramatic pause as you mention (and go back up to) the sky? Thanks for posting. It's inspiring.

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    ALAMO CAR RENTAL

    Script:

    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky.

    25 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    My wife (my second worst critic) thought this read too slow and musical. I spent half the afternoon editing it and didn't want that effort to go to waste, so I posted it anyway.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Alamo-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James. I really enjoyed listening to your voice. I'd be interested to hear the read with two tweaks: a bit faster and with a more energy. It sounded like a documentary to me at first, not necessarily a car commercial.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James I didnt get the sense you were connected to the script on this one. There was a lack of "umph" in the storytelling here.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James. I think I agree with the others. I didn't really feel connected to what you were trying to tell me about Alamo. You have a great voice. For me it needed a little more - for lack of a better word -- selling.

    Peer Feedback:

    Don't make this any faster...it's a 30s spot. But you very clearly read it...I heard your british accent. You can act. Why didn't you apply that acting skill here? Hmmm? The audio quality was great. Keep up the great work.

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    Alaska Airlines

    Script:

    At Alaska Airlines, you'll never fight for a seat. Maybe that's because we give you one when you book your flight. Check-out the selection of seats and low fairs at alaskaair.com

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    I don't have good acoustics in the room I'm able to record in, but beyond that, what can I improve on? Did it sound genuine? Did I deliver the soft joke "maybe it's because..." with snarky'ness that was unattractive?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117688/script-recording-98934.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd recommend a pop filter. It was good, but I think it could flow better, seems a little choppy between sentences. I think flowing better would make the joke work. Thanks!

    Peer Feedback:

    I uploaded the wrong mp3 and cannot delete it or replace it with another mp3.... please don't worry annot commenting on this one....

    Peer Feedback:

    The flow could be more natural. with a spot like this that is very short, I might try memorizing the script and then just trying to let if flow naturally during recording. A big smile in your voice can give that "nudge, nudge, wink, wink" that you need to make the line work. God knows any of us who have traveled have experienced hassles over seating. Good luck!

    Peer Feedback:

    I was picking up a background hiss, and some room reverberation.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you so much if you commented. Again, I don't have the privileges to delete the submission...so please don't spend any time critiquing this one...it is the incorrect file. The gain on this was way off.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Gallardo's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-128/script-recording-34350.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Great.

    Peer Feedback:

    A couple thoughts.
    voice and performance -- great. really nice pace and interpretation.
    I thought I heard "elegan twagon" instead of "elegant wagon"

    the script itself had a glitch after "Maybe that's....."

    the sound bed didn't do much for me. Admittedly, this is totally subjective.
    You're talking about an Audi A6 -- I envision something more stylish, sexy and powerful. This track put me in a quaint little relaxing village in Spain, or something.

    Hoping this is helpful.
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    really nice work
    regards
    balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the uppity tone. Very appropriate for the script. Excellent as always!

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    Audi Avant A&

    Script:

    Audi Avant A6

    In Europe, beautiful and elegant wagons are not staging a dramatic comeback. Simply because they never went out of style. Over there, function is never enough. Form matters. Design counts. Maybe that's why the word for stylish wagon is Avant. With its agile four-link front suspension, standard Quattro® all-wheel drive and the 220 hp 3.0 liter V6, a compelling choice. Think true German luxury touring car that just happens to have a bit of extra room. The 2003 Avant A6 by Audi. Luxury. And room to spare.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    Hello! Trying out a commercial with new studio set up. Think I finally have the room in condition. How does the room sound to your ears ? Thanks for any and all feedback. All the best, Scott

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8309/script-recording-37955.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi There Scott,

    You have a smooth, nice sounding voice and I did not hear any echos in your recording. It sounded very clear, your new studio set up sounded great!

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    Hey Carol,

    Thanks for the compliments, encouragement and feedback regarding the room. I am very happy with the set up now!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Scott. Your voice sounds nice and clear and the performance is good. To my ears, the overall sound is slightly muted, as if the highs are being suppressed. I'd be interested in what others have to say.

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Scott,

    Always nice hearing from you. I've been on a little hiatus, but I'll be back. Liked the delivery, nice friendly, conversational tone. If you were to add a music bed, I think it would enhance it further. However, very nice read.

    All the best,
    LCW (Lenny)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Lenny,

    Nice to hear from you. Good to hear that you are back. Thanks for the encouragrment. Have been thinking to put it together with music but wanted feedback about the room. That's why it was just voice on this one.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Elton,

    Thanks for the feedback and compliment.

    After reading your comments I checked the file out on the spectral view in Adobe Audition. You were right! There is not audio above 16,000 hertz!

    Perhaps the compressor did the trick.

    You have great ears Elton.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    i like your sound it works with the genre

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    Audi Avant A6

    Script:

    In Europe, beautiful and elegant wagons are not staging a dramatic comeback.
    Simply because they never went out of style. Over there, function is never enough. Form matters. Design counts.

    Maybe that's why the word for stylish wagon is Avant.

    With its agile four-link front suspension, standard Quattro® all-wheel drive and the 220 hp 3.0 liter V6, a compelling choice.

    Think true German luxury touring car that just happens to have a bit of extra room. The 2003 Avant A6 by Audi. Luxury. And room to spare

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Scott Martin's recording

    Trying the voice-over with a music mix. Does it work or not? Thanks for your ears. All the best, Scott

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-8309/script-recording-38052.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well, it's interesting, Scott. Delivered pretty nicely. However, it just doesn't FEEL like an Audi ad. Audi is a luxury/performance brand...VW's competitor to BMW. Sophisticated performance...even if it's a wagon. The ling about the suspension, all wheel drive, 220HP....all speak of performance--not pampering. Your choice of music bed would suggest frilly pampering IMHO. The tone kinda does too.

    I would suggest a music bed with some dramatic driving feel and a tone in the delivery as well. It's fairly cliché for the genre, but it's what's out there being done for these brands....BMW, Audi, Lexus, Infinity, Acura, Jaguar, Mercedes, Cadillac. Hope that helps, man...keep up the good work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Tom,

    Thanks for the feedback. I thought that it might need a softer read with the music I tried, but you are correct that it needs stronger music!

    Thanks for the feedback!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    "Ling" should read "line" LOL

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    Really nice, Scott, but watch your falling inflections. Listen closely to Europe, comeback, comeback, style, enough, matters, counts, and Avant. Notice how the pitch falls in each case; that's something to work on I think. I like your tone though and how well the music complements it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Bill,

    Thanks for catching that. I will have to keep that in mind on the next recording. Appreciate the feedback and encouragement.

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    I'd edit out some of the space in the spaces... if you know what I mean. At several points it sounded like you'd wrapped up. This would be fine for video, though. I agree with the comment above about inflection.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Farar,

    Thanks for the insightful comments. I intentionally split up the segments to fit the music better. Need to find better fitting music instead. Need to keep an ear on the inflections.

    Thanks!

    All the best,

    Scott

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice! Dude,didn't even know you did this! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    nice work maybe try softening up your voice a little because its a luxury car the music wasnt bad and maybe speed it up a little .

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    This re-bounce of a previous submission. I tweaked the E.Q., in the hope of making the voice pop a bit more. Did it work? Thanks, friends - Jimbobway

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-86216.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It's a great, great read!

    Nice audio and great communication of the script's message. Your voice is perfect for this kind of voice over.

    I also heard clicking under the vocal, perhaps mouth noise?

    Peer Feedback:

    I stopped listening after about 40s because I was hearing a very announcery delivery, a very processed sound. I don't like the EQ I'm hearing here. Just my opinion, of course. But as far as the tone/delivery, I'm hearing a very predictable and impersonal vibe. I know that it's a fine line from good and bad...personal and impersonal...but I have to say, that this read lacks in personal connect.

    Peer Feedback:

    There's definitely something strange with the processing. The S's (especially at the ends of words - most prevalent in all of the "it's") seem dull and lispy - like you overdid the settings on a de-esser. And the T's are very sharp and pointed as if the attack was emphasized. And I missed the K on "work" - maybe because of the processing (maybe a gate?).

    Somewhat agree with TxTom that it's a little announcer sounding. But that may just be in the vocal quality you chose to give it to make the VO "pop" - kind of a throaty and pointed sound rather than a more rounded and airy sound (the last two lines being the exceptions - they were airier and warmer in tone), coupled with the processing. Not necessarily a bad thing. However, it calls attention to the voice rather than the message. In other words, Audi is the star here, not you. Like TxTom stated, it's a fine line and very subjective. And it isn't like we don't hear this kind of delivery and sound (the "pop") all the time. Matter of client and artistic choice, I guess.

    Did you choose the music before doing the read? I ask because maybe the pizzicato violins influenced your attack of the script and your processing choices. It is a bit "clipped" and sharp. Again, maybe an artistic choice - go with it or take the opposite approach and draw the words out a bit.

    Anyway, after listening to it several times, the interpretation is fine. The music choice is fine. The message is fine. The timing is fine. The most bothersome things seem to be the severity of the processing and the overall mix. The VO does "pop", but I would think that, with only subtle tweaks in processing, your voice would pop anyway. You may have pushed it too far. Only my 2c.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Mart, Tom and James -

    I really appreciate your feedback and suggestions.

    I totally agree that the vocal draws too much attention to itself (the performance is over a year old, and I like to think I've improved since then). I was indeed talking "at" the listener and not "to" him/her. Since that time, I've been working hard at making my reads more connected, personal and subtle.

    The main reason I posted it is because the vocal was recorded on a condenser mic (hence the sharpness), and I wanted to see it I could fill the sound out with the right E.Q.. Guess I got my answer, huh? A few days ago, I purchased a Shure SM7B cardiod mic, in the hope of toning-down the harsh consonants, the mouth noises and the edginess.

    And yes, I did do the vocal to the music track. It's exactly 60 seconds long, and I wanted to see if I could do it to time.

    I'll post something new soon, and hopefully it will be an improvement.

    Thanks, again!

    Jim

    Peer Feedback:

    Jim -
    sorry, commenting a bit late.
    I like the performance, even though Tom was thinking it was too announcery. It seems like you're going for the archetypical luxury car (or luxury product in general) delivery. And the music bed had a nice orchestral feel that matched. so that was ok.

    (My personal opinion about "announcery" goes back and forth. I sense that recent auditions that warn against "announcery" are really trying to say "not sports or radio announcer, please". That leaves a nice bit of room for a flowing, smooth delivery with inflection.)

    I'm onboard with James' point about a "pointed" rather than "rounded" sound in the voice - if this had been produced with a slick, high-end visual, that crispiness would fit in nicely.

    The vocal processing, to me, sounds like a compression thing (audio compression, not the mp3 file compression artifact that I always complain about), and perhaps some high-end EQ...? Using any compression plugins on the track?

    My 2c on the SM7B - few VO pros (that I've heard of) use a dynamic mic in the booth. You'll hear about the occasional RE20, but not that often. Perhaps others have heard otherwise.

    cheers!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm with Dave on the Shure mic. Dynamic mics aren't the best choice for VO. Most, if not all, VO engineers will tell you that. They do cut down on the "noise" somewhat, but you sacrifice the fuller dynamic (odd isn't it?) range and overtones of the human voice for VO. A decent inexpensive large diaphragm condenser mic would be a better investment along with good micing technique and subtle FX processing.

    Peer Feedback:

    The vocal was a bit hot and the processing a bit overbaked, but I thought the read was excellent! There were a couple of edits that jumped out at me. That's the type of read I hear everyday. Watch out for the mouth noise. When you crank up your vocal too much they tend to become really prominent and the mid processing eq (4-8K) needs to come down a bit, it was piercing. Great read tho.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good read! "Your" sounded a bit like "ya". Too much mouth noise and the voice sounded over processed. As far as announcery sounding, maybe a bit but I think the way you did it works. You do have a great sounding voice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, everybody! Your critiques and suggestions are greatly appreciated. I'll definitely be implementing them in my upcoming reads.

    And Dave, yes indeed, I EQ'd the shit out my vocal on that read! (Ahhhh...BUSTED!!!) I used very little compression, however.

    Regarding the use of a Shure SM7B dynamic mic, as opposed to the Audio-Technica AT875R condenser I've been using up till now, I just hooked-up them both up to the Golden Age Pre-73 MKIII preamp I just bought, and it would seem that the preamp is what really makes the difference. The condenser innately has a crisper sound, but it can sometimes over-accentuate my consonants and plosives. The dynamic (with the preamp, mind you) seems to grab a fuller range of vocal overtones without compromising the consonants or high-end.

    Thanks, again - Jim

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Thoughts? Thanks! Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-48083.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, Jim!! Obviously you've done a few of these before.

    Spot on for a luxury car ad like this. Your delivery and voice are custom made for this genre. If I can find anything at all to improve upon (at the risk of nit-picking), I'd say maybe work on your sibilance a bit.

    Otherwise, you would certainly entice me to buy an Audi... along with a substantial raise, of course.

    Keep at it!

    Mike F.

    Peer Feedback:

    sounds like a car commercial!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Hey, Guys - Here's something a bit "over-the-top." Doing this kind of read can really be fun. Thanks! - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-34758.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Please ignore this submission. I listened back to it about an hour after posting it here, and it sounded like crap. I did a new voice track and will post it here right away. Thanks! Jim

    Peer Feedback:

    I listened to each version only once and liked this one slightly more. (A little more nuance/connectedness.) Jim, you know it's not crap. Dude, this is good stuff.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Oops! I just re-checked the copy and realized how far I had strayed from what was written. Here's a corrected version. Thanks - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-48087.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Jim, wow, really liked that. The sound bed was perfect for that, I also thought your tone and pacing were about 99%. The levels matched well between the vocal and sound bed. I liked it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim!
    I really liked this: great variation on all the lists, great pace, great tone! The only thing I would be wary of is making sure the "in" in "intangible" is audible. Great! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    My comments mirror the previous two. Well done, Jim!

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    jimbobway --
    really liked this spot. to me, it was believable, and resembles an actual Audi campaign.
    music is great, and sounded like it finished naturally at the end (not just a fade).
    it's a keeper.

    cheers,
    DS.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    Here's the re-do of that not-so-hot earlier submission. I hope this is better. Thanks, guys...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-34768.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Enjoyed it very much! Your voice is engaging for sure and that music complements it well. You don't sound entirely connected with the words, however. The consistency in your performance makes me think this. There should be a bit more variation if you are really connected with what you are saying. Maybe this is because you've recorded so many takes? Just a hunch. Even so, your voice sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good tension...but bill called you on the variation...and I'll point to a down turn at the end of every sentence. But good job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks, Bill and TxTom -

    I agree with all your criticisms. Sometimes it's easy to over-think things. Actually, after a good night's sleep, I listened to my original submission of this piece (posted about an hour before this one), and (I.M.H.O) it seems to be a more interesting read than this one. I'd be interested in the opinions of both of you regarding that.
    .
    Thanks, again - Jim

    Peer Feedback:

    Amazing voice! Your voice kind of reminds me of Marvel legend Stan Lee. I agree with the others about the variation. I look forward to your future uploads.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear PaqVoice1's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/paqvoiceaudi.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    It sounds good, good voice quality. It seemed to me though that you lost some clarity halfway through...don't think you rushed it, but you may have quickened your pace a bit and I think your diction suffered a bit. Keep the same pacing throughout and I think you got it!

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah well one of my issues is dropping the NH (or Na Hampsha) dialect not easy to do since I was born here (lol) but thats one thing I'd like to tone down. Thanks for the comments and I will definitely work harder!

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    Car Dealer Holiday Promo

    Script:

    Hmmmm... what is SANTA's Christmas wish?

    He's been leaving some hints...

    ...something shiny...
    ...he likes shiny...

    A new stereo...

    New touchscreen...

    Leather seats...heated, please!

    Make it a hundred eighty-five horsepower...
    ...the elves like that.

    Finally, the peace of mind that it's a Honda.

    The 2017 Honda Accord,
    Santa.

    Now, at your North Alabama Honda Dealer...
    Huntsville, Decatur, and Florence.

    89 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Putting my mouth where my critique is again. I re-formatted the script a little for my own clarity.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-21601/script-recording-99878.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Well done, James. To me, it sounded like the inner child coming out of the adult, getting excited at the possibility of getting a Honda Accord for Christmas. Nice touch with the holiday-ish sounding background music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James - This sounded very nice! I like the music selection, which served well as a background and didn't distract from your message or obscure any words. The pacing was good, and the underlying excitement was restrained in a good way. The sound quality was very good with no hissing/breathing/background noises that I could hear.
    Well done!

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    Chrysler

    Script:

    In the right hands, iron, steel, and aluminum can be transformed into precious metals. At Chrysler, we have one simple philosophy: to create great cars. With innovative, influential designs and the quest for engineering excellence. Taking the basic elements and crafting something dynamic, unique and extraordinary. To learn more, call 1-800-CHRYSLER, or visit chryslercars.com. Chrysler. Engineered to be great cars.

    76 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    I wanted to put my mouth where my money is. This is my take on my re-write of the script. Going for a tough and dynamic read by taking clues from the text.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Chrysler-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Awesome job, and excellent way to show how its done. I also love the fact that you did not put music in with it. Nicely done.

    Peer Feedback:

    VERY nice!

    Great tone, great pace, great sense of "class" to the read

    If I had to quibble, the "With innovative, influential designs" bit might need a touch more separation between innovative and influential, they kind of sound like one word right now. Just a taste thing for me... otherwise, a fantastic read!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job James!

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    great read. well done.

    DS.

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    Delta Airlines Interactive

    Script:

    It's always the right time to fly Delta. And to assure a perfect trip, Delta has prepared this program to offer you important facts and helpful information, along with tips for travelers. Just click "start" for practical information. 50 years have passed since Delta established itself as a national carrier, and Delta has come a long way since then. It has matured into an international airline, serving thousands of destinations. Since its inception, Delta has served as a steadfast air bridge between Asia and the world.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jmcbride1983's recording

    Just took the Intro to VO workshop on Sunday and have been trying to practice based on the feedback. I'm trying to sound more "conversational" and less announcer-like. All feedback is welcomed (recording quality, usage of music, tips to make the recording sound better, etc.). Thanks forum friends.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-12919/script-recording-45929.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read, good music pic. Seemed just a little choppy, I never felt the flow of the read, sort of like a short story the beginning, middle and end. I got lost for second because of the missing part of the script. very nice recording quality, I did hear quite a bit of mouth noise, clicks and smacks. Decent software can remove it easily. You have a very nice powerful voice, however to me, it sounded a little unnatural, maybe just relax and try to have fun with it. Good Luck, Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave,

    Thanks for the feedback. Sorry about the missing script, haha, didn't realize I forgot to type that part in. I agree with everything else you say. I'm going to keep practicing on this script and try to make it more natural. As far as mouth noise, it was getting late and I didn't have the energy to edit them all out, but do you have any tips for preventing mouth noise when speaking? Thanks.
    John

    Peer Feedback:

    For dry mouth I just try to stay hydrated, Biotene works well comes in a mouthwash and also a convenient spray bottle. There is another great product, (forget the name of it) I purchased it at a local music shop also comes in a spray bottle for singers with fatigued vocal chords and dry mouth. For too much saliva, all you can do is stop and take a break. Maybe a saltine cracker? Good Luck John, Voice On!

    Peer Feedback:

    Guitar Center sells Vocal Eze. It's good for straining vocal chords. It's herbal and I've used it when I sing. It works. There's another online concoction called Entertainer's Secret. In fact, there are quite a few. http://vocalhealthcare.com/productinformation.htm

    Good reference.

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    Dodge Ram - Sam Elliot

    Script:

    A collection of treasures lies between these bumpers.
    Legendary engines.
    Industry gold.
    Awards...out the tailpipe.
    And world class warranties to back it all up.
    Sounds like you just hit the jackpot.
    Ram.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Moe Biscuits's recording

    I wanted to go for a "trying to sound like Sam Elliott without sounding like I'm trying to sound like Sam Elliott" kinda thing. I listened to the original commercial. I might not have nailed it, but I think I did alright. Let me know what you think. Thanks!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-59923/script-recording-62439.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did more than alright! Sounds great to me. I can't remember the original, but I like yours very much. Colored it all just enough while still keeping that cool cowboy sound. Nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice attempt at Sam. If you listen closely to his delivery, you'll notice that he hangs on to or elongates his vowel sounds and doesn't stress the consonants so much, which gives that rich, lazy bass sound. Try slowing down the delivery a little and savoring those rich vowel sounds.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback! I recorded this before listening to the original. My interpretation of it was a little snarky (Awards out the tailpipe, You just hit the jackpot...), so I was kinda goin' for that as well. I was also trying to give the "Ram" delivery at the end an air of, "duh."

    I'm also curious about the sound quality. Haven't changed my equipment (Samson CO1U, Audacity, Win8 laptop), but changed the noise reduction settings a little and experimented with normalization and cross fading...I think.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sound quality sounds great to me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Moe Biscuits...but I haven't had any biscuits yet ;-)

    A VERY nice read...very...

    I did not read others comments (never do till after I write my comments)...when I played it I did not hear Sam Eliot -- I heard the guy who has made Motel 6 so popular (..."we'll leave the light on..")

    You have a warm, rustic, believable voce that will sell America ice in the winter...I might pick up the pace and put a bit more of a snarky smile on IF you want to sound like Sam E. ...but you want them to hire you so sound like you -- which sounds just fine to me

    Bill

    Peer Feedback:

    Not much to add...great attitude...great pipes. Sound quality sounds good to me also.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Al Urkawich's recording

    Trying out something different!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-10257/script-recording-31091.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Howdy Al,

    Just two quibbles...
    1) I thinl you may have let the music intro go on a touch too long before you potted yourself up; perhaps edit the music file? Not sure. The music is great btw!

    2) I think you hurried the last 'Ram' a bit...it just sounded too closely bunched in with the line previous to it. Not sure here either, just a hunch.

    OTT, Damn! Very cool! I could envision this either on the radio or on the boob-tube!

    Regards,

    Steve O'Sullivan

    Peer Feedback:

    Cool....... not quite Elliot but so close :).....

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    Wow....really nice Al...actually I thought that you matched Sam Elliot - but in your own pitch level! I did agree that you could have waited 1 or 2 beats before the final "ram," and check the accent on "warranties." Great job!!!!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey... Thanks Marianna!

    I had some time today and heard a few reads and thought I'd give it a shot!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Gallardo's recording

    I tried to seep in a little "Texas" in this voice over.... See what ya think... padnah!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-128/script-recording-34356.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Larry: Great job. good scrunchy voice, good pacing, well done soundbed. The only tip I would give is to add a few beats after "alien armies" so the paradox sinks in to the listener. Otherwise A+. Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    cool. really well done. sounds like a professionally produced national ad to me.
    the accent sounded real (like George Bush) I thought. I'll leave it to others to disagree....

    Great production.
    DS.

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    Eldorado

    Script:

    No clients, no conferences, no appointments, no schedules.
    For contemporary man, that kind of freedom is found in a different form:
    ELDORADO ... with the NORTHSTAR system ... by CADILLAC.

    31 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Another short :15 spot?

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Eldorado-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Not too bad.. I thought that the music worked and your VO tone was good. Though I would have suggested to vary your word delivery a bit. My ears think it's a tad monotone to be silky/sexy which your tone would really work with.
    CJ

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James,

    I LOVED this one, you did a FANTASTIC job!! You have such a nice, clear, tone to your voice and I could listen to it for a long time!

    Keep up the great work!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

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    James
    I LIKE this one a lot!!!
    Good work !
    Balazs

    Peer Feedback:

    jamesromick --
    great voice as usual. I like your stuff a lot.
    this spot was a little flat for a luxury commercial in my opinion. the first line describing the all the annoying things that aren't there -- should've had more relaxation in it, I think.

    The music bed level was really low in the beginning, especially for a electric bass.

    I say again, you have a great voice - and it tends to lift the performance.

    cheers,
    DS.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Canadian_voice's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-80073/script-recording-61822.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Wow, 26 views and no comments.

    Canadian_voice, your voice doesn't sound Canadian. What is your native language? I can hear a lot of your nativity being transfered into this read, which made it hard to understand the first time I listened to it.

    I noticed that you are pausing where there are no commas in the script, which makes your read sound choppy. Take care to look for punctuation in the script.

    There seems to be an odd background sound while you are speaking. What equipment are you using?

    All the best,

    Lee.

    Peer Feedback:

    The best piece of advice I can offer is to change your ID.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your recording sounds like you were too close to the mic and or had the volume up to high for your chosen distance.
    Aside from working on losing your accent, you might try recording in your native language.
    Your delivery sounds too much like your just reading...try to personalize it...own the words, and talk to one person you know and want to communicate this information with...and then try to make it conversational.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Dave Saunders's recording

    Just a little weekend fun. Actually, that's a lie. Scott Burns and I worked on this spot for awhile, and I think he did a terrific job producing it. I hope you get a kick out of it. All comments welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2126/script-recording-90347.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Love it! Sounds very professional.

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the nostalgic turned modern effect. Your voice really captures the essence of the manly man Ford lover. I can relate totally to this and want to buy a mustang...LOL.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Dave!
    Love the contrast. Great stuff!
    BillH

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice, Dave.

    You and Scott captured that mid 60's commercial style. (I was a kid when the first Mustangs rolled off the assembly line and remember how exciting it was.)

    Good contrast to today's style and production quality.

    Very cool.

    Peer Feedback:

    thanks everyone, for the kind words.
    whenever you throw a demo out on the forum, you're really wearing your heart on your sleeve. *gulp*
    You sink a lot of time and treasure into building this thing and run the risk of your baby being called ugly. LOL

    cheers to all!
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    Dave,
    Excellent job on both the read and the production. Kept me engaged throughout the entire copy. Really nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    That's some great stuff right there folks!

    Nice work on the production, the sound was really good. Great delivery. A couple of changes I would make personally, I would make the ol day recording a bit more nasally to suit the vinyl scratch (listen to a couple of period pieces from those eras). The effect on the very end, kinda of ruined the experience of a great demo quality piece.

    Great job!
    Danny

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    General Motors -- People in Motion

    Script:

    There was a time when people couldn’t chase their dreams any further than a good horse could carry them. When men and women who wanted to see the world spent days just getting to the next town. Driving changed all that. It frees us from the constraints of place. We go where we want, when we want. General Motors. People in Motion.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    OK. I took some suggestions, ignored others, and pumped another one out.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/GeneralMotors2-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I think "Driving changed all that" needs a big smile and a little more edge. Good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    In terms of having that personal connection I was talking about...compared to the last one you did of this script...this is spot on with the connection...much friendlier, much more personal. THAT's the stuff I wasn't hearing last read. Made me smile. You left announcerish tone at the door.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nick - I wanted to put that pause in that I did the last time, but I had to knock this out quickly and get ready for my on-camera commercial class. Only had time for 2 takes, some editing and add the different music for the second half.

    Tom - That's what I was aiming for - and to pick up the pace. So, how's this Skype thingy work? I'd give you my email, but I'm not sure I want it out there for everyone to see. Stupid, because it's easily found anyway.

    Peer Feedback:

    My user name on there is tom.hand.cctx2112. You should be able to find me that way.

    Peer Feedback:

    I much prefer the last read you did though you did slow down a bit toward the end. This one sounds much more rushed. I don't like it as much as the last read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Another great performance, James. Really impressive how you can adjust like that, according to others' directions. Well done. I like them both.

    Peer Feedback:

    What was that you said about opinions, James??? People who differ from yours are a-holes?? Was that it? ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with Tom: This read was much more personable and natural than the last.

    Peer Feedback:

    Tom - Nope. Don't put words in my mouth. I did not intimate that people who disagree with me are a##holes. I've been accused of being one myself - by my closest friends. And I'm sure that most people that disagree with me are quite lovely individuals. I just meant that, like that specific anatomical part, everyone has (at least) one opinion. And I reserve the right to judge for myself if that opinion is useful and/or valid. If, however, there seems to be some consensus of opinion, then I would presume that a little introspection on my part is in order. Another thing that I've learned is that you just can't please everybody. (Somewhere in the back of my addled brain I hear Ricky Nelson singing "Garden Party".)

    Peer Feedback:

    It was a JOKE! As Triumph the Insult Dog would say "I keeed."

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    Just setting the record straight. I DO have a sense of humor, y'know.

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    I sent you a request for contact on skype.

    Peer Feedback:

    good performance , i liked the friendly tone

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gmura's recording

    Hey everyone, I'm back after being away for a month due to travels and am picking up where I left off. Here is a Honda script I chose to practice with, and I added a backing track to it to practice assembling as well. I recorded this just before I left on my trip, and now I cannot seem to find the script in the library, so thus none is posted. My apologies - I know this has be recorded by others before, so perhaps some here are already familiar with this script. Moving forward, this shouldn't be the case as I won't have this kind of delay in my posts. Thanks, and all feedback most welcome.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-116549/script-recording-91722.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Cute spot. Nice music selection.

    You might tighten it up just a touch to squeeze everything into 30 seconds.

    You might mess a little with the EQ. The S's are just a little dull. And there's a bit op plosive popping.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks jamesromic, I appreciate the comment. In the future I will definitely watch my timing more carefully, and I'm still working on mic technique, trying to find the 'happy spot' for my vocals in my booth. Thanks again.

    Peer Feedback:

    Finding that "sweet spot" takes a while. And it may change from session to session, depending on how you move around. Even a slight tilt or shake of the head can change the sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ahhh, you just said something that I now recognize as a problem... I tend to move my head a little when talking - side to side, up and down, and that may be effecting the sound quality of my recordings.... I'm ordering a head brace tonight... j/k... I'm seriously gonna work on that. Thank you!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    A new take on an old script. Better? I hope so.... Thanks - Jim

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-6710/script-recording-27106.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I didn't hear your first go at this, but this recording sounds like a winner. The only comment I can make is that the pauses seem to be a bit long to me. I do agree there should be pauses.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Jim,

    I also didn't hear your first performance, but I like this one. The pitch was good, however I do agree with Teggray about the pauses, however I know the effect you were going after in regards to describing the elements of the ad. Also, great choice of music; it fit the script nicely.

    Best of luck, LCW.

    Peer Feedback:

    I'll piggyback on other's comments when I say that I think your voice is a nice match for the product and copy. As a suggestion, I wonder if you've considered upping your tempo just a bit. In addition to shoring up the pauses the others mentioned, I think a bit faster pace in your read my inject some additional excitement to your read. Your voice is dignified all by itself, I don't think you need to slow things down to try and inject some gravitas!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice quality, perfect for this type of spot. Also your audio chain sounds very nice. The only a couple of things I wouldn't have done is, pad out the end of the spot with music and since its copy written for 30 seconds, kept the timing down to that. Other than that very nice!

    Peer Feedback:

    I accept that the pace and the use of music choices that amount to self-direction.
    It worked for me until you let down on the big one, "provocative."

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear DEEPDUDE75's recording

    this is my second crack at it. i'm recording with a new producer, any feedback would be greatly appriecated.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-897/script-recording-36014.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Vocal performance - wow! that is the voice for me...I love it, drama, deep voice, music, OMG. Good. Let me rush out and buy one.

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    Jaguar XF

    Script:

    The Jaguar XF fuses sports car styling and performance with the refinement, features and space of a luxury saloon. XF embodies the Jaguar philosophy of creating beautiful, fast cars, and defines a new driving experience: Sporting Luxury.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KentBP's recording

    Trying another transportation demo with music. Let me know what you think. Thanks.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-2869/script-recording-69211.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    While the music did give off a sense of luxury, it kind of distracted me from your read. I havent done much with mixing, but you might only have to bring up the vocals more. I liked your dulcet tones; felt like a mafia-type was trying to get me to buy a Jaguar. The read itself was a bit rushed though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. I agree. your voice is lost in the bed.
    Ian

    Peer Feedback:

    Your 's' sounds are way too "in your face". Turn on a de-esser, adjust mic or your mouth to back off the intensity. The music level is a real problem getting into the second sentence since I couldn't understand what you were saying without reading the script along with you.

    I didn't like the long "e" sound on "the" before refinement. You pronounced the relaxed "the" as the first word of the read and I think you should continue that through.

    You had a good pace going the first sentence that you should sustain through the read. You sped up too much on the last half.

    Hope that helps.

    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all for taking the time to listen to my practice demo and for providing insightful and meaningful feedback. I value your comments and critiques.

    Peer Feedback:

    A very urban sound to your enunciation/pronunciation. However, your processing of your voice hurts my ears with the sizzling upper range (in headphones) and the levels don't work...as someone mentioned, the mix drowns the vocals a bit.

    Advice: don't EQ the voice upward in the upper range.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

    Thanks for the great feedback for my last recording. It is always good to get a fresh set of ears to listen to something and point out some great details that help me improve. I have recorded the script again with the previous critiques in mind but this time with a technique my coach has been urging me to try. Please let me know if it works better. Thanks as always!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-113255/script-recording-94429.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    WOW!

    I loved it! Loved everything about it!I It flowed really well and somehow you sounded excited about the product without actually going overboard. It was really a pleasure to listen to. Great work!

    Peer Feedback:

    See if you can tighten it up to 30 seconds.

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    Sweet! Love the tribal feel. Way to nail the end, loved the effect! Dang that James. I guess somebody has to have a stopwatch :-) (that's a nod James) Seriously good work!

    Peer Feedback:

    Needs to be tightened up...and the musical choice wasn't a good match IMO to the Jaguar brand. Just my opinion.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    I tried the three in a row again and sped up the delivery for a radio commercial instead of a TV commercial. Which one do you like the most, 1st 2nd or 3rd? Any other recording quality or comments regarding the client's tag would be welcome too! Don't be afraid to speak your mind - I want to improve!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-117688/script-recording-97982.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice because it is very bright and cheerful. I thought the 3rd take was the best because you had the best flow on that one. That being said - I think you really need to work on making it flow better. This phrase, 'advanced keyless technology' is difficult to say smoothly and that is something that I would practice until it really flows.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree that the 3rd had the best flow. Take the flow of #3 and combine it with your enthusiastic, 1st voice. Your 3rd voice was perfect for corporate, informational narration type work.

    Peer Feedback:

    Bright and cheerful voice that cuts through. I think the third cut was best, though I did hear noticeable mouth noise / clicks with my phones. Was also curious about the brand name, as Volkswagen is not spelled with a 't'; but maybe not a big deal with a practice script.

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    Land Rover

    Script:

    Walk into a Land Rover retailer, and you'll find that the experience of buying or having a vehicle serviced with Land Rover really is different. Refreshing, some say. We promise that it's not just rhetoric. We want your experience in a Land Rover Center to be memorable, entertaining and productive.

    32 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear hankradio's recording

    Trying another take on being conversational without being a "salesman"...

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-60657/script-recording-59903.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this read. Nice pace, got all the words and your voice has just the right volume and enthusiasm without going over the top. You sound friendly, making the Land Rover Center sound like a friendly place to go.

    Peer Feedback:

    A fairly engaging read, but in the very first few words, you hear radio guy. There's just something about the way you say "walk" there. Overall, you've got a very appealing voice and for the most part, delivery...but I think the difference you're seeking is to sound as though you have a smile, but not too giddy. Just a shade TOO happy sounding.

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    Lincoln LS

    Script:

    Luxury is more than a hood ornament. It’s a feeling you get when you’re living by your own rules. It’s knowing that sometimes the best thing about a 3.9 litre 32-valve V8 is that it gets you to a place where you can slow down faster. The new LS from Lincoln.

    51 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Rony Wright's recording

    Playing around with different approaches.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-4592/script-recording-23768.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Unique style and great voice...as well as well paced. I like the way the music fades out in between the script, gives it a great feel and punch! Keep up the great work:)

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice voice for a luxury car commercial. Performance is excellent and good music choice.

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    Mercedes C Class "Moon"

    Script:

    Mercedes-Benz C Class “Moon”

    What do I know of the moon? I know it’s a heavenly body that plays hide and seek with those who raise their eyes at night. I know it’s lonesome glow has illuminated the faces of countless lovers and has been the muse for poets through out the centuries. But most of all I know how killer it looks gleaming on my C Class Coupe. Mercedes-Benz. I mean, c’mon.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear marcus waterman's recording

    Hey gang, Here is the re-do of my Mercedez spot. With the great feedback of those who commented I have recut it to a :30. I also went with another approach I originally had in mind to hopefully keep within the more traditional image of Mercedes but with just a little Edge. (the pun's for you James ;-) As always I appreciate all feedback.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-105047/script-recording-94405.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I would say this work is almost like a pro. The mysterious music and the tone is on point. Your pacing is perfect. I just wish you could speak a little bit more clearly and emphasize the brand name more.

    Overall, I liked it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yep. Definitely a winner! Tighter, and much improved over the last iteration. Really good production value too.

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    Best I've heard in category! KILLER !!! I mean .... c'mon !!!!! Awesome, Marcus.

    Peer Feedback:

    My thanks for the comments folks. James, thanks for the follow through. I appreciate your time in helping me work this out.

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice. This version is a great improvement! I really like the way you did the sentence "But most of all I know how killer it looks gleaming on my C Class Coupe". It made me smile because I could hear how proud you were of seeing the moon shining on your shiny Mercedes! Painting pictures for the listener is what this job is about. Awesome!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks raithrovers1! Much appreciated!

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    New Truck Spot

    Script:

    There’s a storm coming…
    re-defining the landscape…
    re-shaping the natural order of things…
    requiring us to adapt…
    to a brand-new environment.
    With it, comes change…
    big change in the vocational truck market.
    It’s time for proven leadership…
    a line of trucks designed for your applications…
    custom-built to your specifications…
    and backed by the best dealer network in the business.
    You deserve trucks that work as hard as you do…
    trucks that deliver the results you demand.
    Some would say timing is everything
    well it’s time…

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Just wanted to do this one because it looked like it was fun.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Truck-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Like the beginning (just right on the tone for the storm coming). Got a little rhythmic in the lists (copy is tough for that). Love the end. I think this is a nice fit for your voice.

    Are you recording these at home? Because I know you've said you're recording quality is appropriate for auditions, but your stuff always sounds great to me and I wondered what you don't like about them. What are you doing for processing?

    Thank you for your additional comment, yesterday. I'm sitting down to work on variety in my reads right now. :)

    Peer Feedback:

    Tonia,

    Right now, I'm in a small closet surrounded by foam and blankets to absorb the sound. I still have to pause recording sometimes for trucks and motorcycles to go by and planes from La Guardia Airport to pass over. I'm using an audiotechnica AT2035 mic through a Tascam US-122 interface and Reaper as my DAW software on a PC. I started out using Audacity, but I'm liking Reaper quite a lot. The learning curve is a little steeper. I like the non-destructive editing. All of the information is still there, whereas in Audacity, if you cut something out, it's gone unless you "undo" it to bring it back. Plus Reaper has some built-in processing plug-ins that are very helpful. Even so, I spend about twice as much time editing and manipulating the sound as I do recording.

    I have drawn up some plans with SketchUp 3D CAD software (it's free) so I can build a more sound proofed, stand alone booth. Now I'm just saving my pennies to buy the construction materials. I met George Whittam at the Edge meet & greet in NYC a couple weeks ago and he gave me some very valuable suggestions on what materials to use without having to break the bank. It should get my noise floor down to the -60 to -70dB range. Very acceptable for a home studio in his opinion. I'm a pretty much an expert woodworker, so it'll be a piece of cake for me to build.

    Hey, if mine turns out to be a success, maybe I can start a sideline business designing home booths for forum members.

    Peer Feedback:

    I know how you feel James. Feels like one every :30 seconds or so during the Open.
    LOL I'm in Flushing ,

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    I just wonder who thought naming a town/sub-division/borough "Flushing"! Just sayin'!

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    Planes, trains and automobiles! How do you get any work done, I wonder? Time you 'came out of the closet' James!. A golden voice such as yours deserves a dedicated space. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey James --
    there's a really good book on both "soundproofing" and acoustics:
    http://www.amazon.com/gp/product/159863285X/ref=oh_details_o05_s00_i00?i...

    great differentiation between soundproofing (all about isolation and lots of mass in the walls and floors) and acoustics (all about reflections), and he talks about dead quiet voice booths vs. more lively music recording studios.

    I'm sure you're well versed, but it's a favorite topic of mine, and like to chat about it. BTW I think blankets on the walls are tough to beat for acoustics -- not sexy, but they can really deaden a booth.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders

    Peer Feedback:

    I'm in a similar setup right now, James. Little closet, some strategically placed foam (which I have glued to polystyrene boards so that I can move them around).

    I'm using Presonus Studio One, and I hear you on the non-destructive editing. Very, very helpful.

    Back to studios: If I end up continuing with audio books, I'll need to get my studio off an outside wall because of car and truck noise. I'm sure it's nothing like what you contend with, but even when just practicing long-form narration it can give me fits.

    If you don't end up selling booths, you could still sell the plans and a little phone support... ;)

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    Nisan Leaf

    Script:

    There was a new idea that sparked a revolution. The revolution built an automotive plant - that created a charge - that jolted the battery - that powered the controller - that revved the motor - that engaged the steering- that rotated the wheels - that moved the car - that carried the parents - that picked up the daughter - that told the joke - that made them smile.

    The Nissan Leaf. It’s amazing what an idea can do.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ckzippy's recording

    I'm trying to get a sense if I'm on the right track, both acting wise & home studio wise. There were no specs with this piece of copy. As for the recording quality, there is some noise gating/hard limiting/normalization applied. I'd like to know if this is audition-quality (for both P2Ps and for agency auditions). Thanks for listening!

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-95689/script-recording-78153.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought you were in the right direction with the inflections, but that ultimately there was no story developed in my head as you said it. The end, especially made it fall a little flat to me. There didn't seem to be the closure of the smile I wanted to feel. Pretty sure there was also a sharp glottal stop on "what" in the tag you'll want to avoid.

    I think it still sounds a little tense and understudied for some of those reasons. But that's me. I definitely think you're pretty close though :)

    Peer Feedback:

    In regards to recording quality....There is a sound of static or some distortion in your speaking voice. Likely coming from the noise gate. I think that needs to be tweaked to have a better shot on P2P and certainly before an agency audition.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you for the feedback, guys! This is *exactly* the kind of thing I needed to hear. It's easy for me to overlisten to myself, so it can be so helpful to get feedback from objective sources. Thanks again!

    Peer Feedback:

    Engaging, interesting voice. The copy builds up to the moment at the end when the family makes a connection. This reading is a little too level. If you can put a more specific, nuanced build-up into the piece, the image at the end will be a powerful conclusion. Have an image in your mind for each thought in the copy and TELL
    the story that ends with the family smiling together. Imagine who you're telling the story to.

    Peer Feedback:

    I think I have to echo Mary on this one; while you have a nice voice, the reading itself is overly casual for the story you're trying to tell. Add a little more drama and excitement to the read; make this Nissan seem like a really cool and exciting thing that everyone should own. It's not a documentary, being informative is secondary to being engaging.

    Peer Feedback:

    If you talk to VO audio engineers (not music audio engineers), most will say that they never use a noise gate - or if they do, they use it very delicately. Over gating creates a "pumping" effect to the recording and could knock out some of your vocal frequencies and clip off the ends and beginnings of words and phrases. Better to use some kind of EQ and some judicious editing (replacing gaps with room tone).

    Can't say for certain, but my guess is that that's what is making this recording sound a bit hollow. That and possibly some applied noise reduction (which is different from noise gating).

    As for the read. The second sentence of this copy is one long list of interconnected things, a "this leads to that" and on and on and on kind of thing - the old "a butterfly flaps it's wings" story. (The current T. Rowe Price commercials are like this.) So, the string of events has to remain unbroken, which is going to be really difficult to do without taking a breath or catch breath here and there (which will probably be edited out and tightened up in post). So, all of those pauses or stops (the dashes in your read) could or should be eliminated - kind of eliding one thing into the next. Think of the second sentence as one long run-on sentence, which it is. The copy writer could just as easily have used commas instead of dashes, or no punctuation at all for that matter. It's one long idea (the tag says so) with many, many, many parts. Which is probably why the dashes are there, to visually set off the different pieces of the whole. But you shouldn't use them to break the links of the chain. If you need a breath here and there, take a quick catch breath but try to keep the pace and flow constant - plow on to the end, but not too quickly. I tried it a few times on one breath. Tough, but not impossible.

    This is a particularly well written and very challenging piece of copy. And, I would suspect, purposefully so.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great Sound Endeed , But i can still hear some pop up sound which i don't like ,, so try to decrease the outcoming air from your mouth a bit and that's all for me :)

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    Nissan Leaf

    Script:

    What if you could drive the future today? Switch on the air conditioning remotely. What
    if you could drive with zero emissions? And you never had to stop for gas again. Ever.
    What if your everyday car was an electric car? And what if one day it could power your
    house? The Nissan Leaf. Innovation that excites.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear dotbatts's recording

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-128514/script-recording-99212.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Dotbatts,

    You've got a nice soothing voice and your expressions are well in place. There are a few minor noise glitches in few instances. Keep it going. All the best!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Really liked how you expressed yourself in this script!
    Sounds very professional and a great recording!
    Very nicely done!!!

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    Yes Yes Yes

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    Porsche 944 Turbo

    Script:

    For lunch, The Porsche 944 Turbo generally prefers Farraris. although it has been known, occasionally, to snack on Corvettes.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jamesromick's recording

    Here's the redo. And here's the original ad. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dvTVk0doJJM I even found the orchestral version of "Purple Haze" to go along with it.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/Porsche944Turbo-VO.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    Here's the link. It doesn't seem to work up there.

    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dvTVk0doJJM

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi James! This definitely has more character and attitude to it than your previous recording. This is actually a really tricky piece of copy. I checked out the original and to me, it had a wildlife documentary, matter-of-fact feel to it juxtaposed with the powerful music. The car as the predator and factual information being provided about it's eating habits. I feel the beginning of your read had that feel, but the second sentence appeared quite choppy to my ears and I'm still not sure about the way you say "Corvettes" as it seems to weaken it for me. But as always, these things are subjective so please feel free to disregard my comments! I wanted to clarify my previous post regarding the lion (which must have seemed a bit random!). I realised that I was actually thinking about Jeremy Iron's fantastic portrayal of Scar in the Lion King with his ominous demeanor, sarcasm and excellent timing. Anyway, tricky copy, tackled well! Niki :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this recording too. Quite professional sounding.The only thing that sounded a little off to me was where you sounded "Ferraris". It kind of sounded like "Arrars".

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    Pyahdonequah
    you might heard arrars since the script says "Farraris" :)))

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    Made me go to the Porsche dealership and look....they don't even come outside when they see me. I drive up in an Impala.

    Peer Feedback:

    James, I also thought this one had a much better tone, attitude, and timing than the first take. Great job.

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    Pre boarding announcement

    Script:

    Good afternoon passengers. This is the pre-boarding announcement for flight 89B to Rome. We are now inviting those passengers with small children, and any passengers requiring special assistance, to begin boarding at this time. Please have your boarding pass and identification ready. Regular boarding will begin in approximately ten minutes time. Thank you.

    Script from Edge Studio's 5,607 Practice Script Library > English Adult > Narration > Announcements

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear saraha616's recording

    I am practicing editing and settings on software- technical advice appreciated.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Sarah, I thought I was onboard a flight to Rome! You sounded great, just like a flight attendant. The recording quality sounded good to my ear. I could not hear any issues with the quality. Well done.

    Peer Feedback:

    What software are you using?

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you! I am using the software Audacity, and a Blue Yeti mic.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sarah, I thought the recording was clear, nice performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    The Blue Yeti is a perfectly serviceable USB mic. It's a favorite with poscasters. Same with Audacity, it's a perfectly serviceable DAW - especially since it's free.

    As you get into VO, you may find that you will want to upgrade, your mic at the very least. There are probably other mic/interface combinations that will better capture the complete range and tone and nuisances of your natural voice.

    The software only understands the 1's and 0's that come into your computer which has nothing to do with the quality of the sound. It's the rest of the bells and whistles and processing FX that separate one from another.

    Not a critique, but I always thought this copy was a strange fit for VO - unless it was something added to the background of a film or video game. Boarding announcements are usually done as a "live announce" by someone at the gate in the airport - usually an airline employee and not a professional voice artist.

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    Saturn Automobiles Canada

    Script:

    At Saturn, we're taking a road less travelled by other car companies. One that began with the idea of building a car with honesty, and teamwork and pride. instead of just an assembly line. A road that continued with a belief that our cars should be just as enjoyable to buy as they are to drive. A path we've followed by listening to our customers and learning from where we travelled yesterday and having the guts to question if it was the right way. A route carved by nothing more really than a lot of desire and some common sense. It's a road that has taken us far. To the homes and hearts of Canadians from east to west. And as far a we're concerned, it's a road with no end in sight, except the vision of a car company, that is always trying to do better.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear lahnkd's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello!

    First of all I would like to say that you have a very good voice. Your read was slow, and that is OK, but some of the breaks within the sentences were a bit long.

    I was not convinced that you were speaking to an audience of one. It felt like you could be more of an "owner" when you speak in this piece. Like you are really a part of the company. That and just a little more excitement in what you are sharing.

    I couldn't quite make out why the recording sounded a little distant. Is there a lot of reverb in the room?

    Keep up the good work.

    All the best,

    Scott

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    Script submitted by dave@clickproseo.com

    Script:

    Alamo Rent a car

    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear David_K's recording

    Back to the AKG 220, ART Tube MP and Beheringer DAC recorded in my home made vocal booth. I read this script for Suchavoice.com back in June of last year when I first started messing around with voice overs. Of course they said I had potential, "sign up for our classes, only $6,000" I thought this script could use a little character.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great read! I loved the interpretation, voice, and music bed. Recording quality was excellent, too. All-in-all, I can't really find anything wrong with it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Brian, I thought this would be a good one for my demo.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice character and delivery

    Peer Feedback:

    Not a 'great read' as brianwelden put it...but certainly commendable at trying to 'hick' it up for the sake of characterization. I would point out that the accent is probably more identifiable as 'Texan' than someone who might live in the mountains of Colorado. Sam Shepherd is making a killing off of the thick accent but it's getting really old...and I LIVE in north Texas. PS...don't use this particular recording in a demo. It would get you bumped from our list.

    Peer Feedback:

    Ok, thanks for the critique. Probably more identifiable as Texan? Who cares. The ad is not solely confined to the, "Mountains of Colorado" "Alamo Territory" "All over America"
    I am not trying to mimic anyone, this is simply a character voice I am comfortable with and is different from my natural voice. P.S. I have no idea what "List" you are talking about.

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    Script submitted by jimbobway

    Script:

    Infiniti FX

    Script:

    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimbobway's recording

    I know this needs some tweaks, but I'd love to get some feedback before I re-record. Thanks! Jim

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    Peer Feedback:

    I got blasted for doing the same thing with a perfume commercial. But I wonder if
    a sexy approach holds up for a full minute on a performance car..

    Peer Feedback:

    Way too slow for my taste. Great pitch and sense of delivery for the product but it left me waiting too long for whatever comes next in the script. Really like your voice - authoritative, attractive. Perhaps the script calls for something more exciting, slightly higher pitch,, faster, to indicate it's better than the other cars in its class. Key words are progressive and transform and provocative, I think.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jim,

    I agree with DavidB. The spaces between most phrases are too long. I see where you were going with this but it's like waiting for the other shoe to drop. I do like your voice and your choice of music. Your sense of luxury and understated power come through nicely.
    Try it with a new approach. Like a thirty-something car owner who is upgrading from a mid-priced car to his first high end vehicle. Just a thought.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Dave - thanks for you commentary, but did you notice the date I recorded and submitted that spot? Hopefully I've improved a bit since then. I'll post a redo and hopefully you can give me your critique on that as well. Please check-out my recent submission of "AARP Create the Good." Thanks, again - Jim.

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    Spyder RS

    Script:

    Spyder RS

    Script:

    There’s a way to tame the wild road…
    it’s called the Can-Am Spyder RS.
    With its dynamic, yet comfortable riding position…
    Confident, three-wheeled stance…
    High-performance Rotax v-twin …
    And sophisticated car technologies for optimal vehicle control….
    The Road will quickly find out who’s boss.
    If it pushes back…
    Give it a flick of the throttle…
    A kick in the gearbox...
    And all Nine-Hundred and Ninety-Eight CC’s of your Spyder RS are ready to put the road in its place…
    whether it’s defying gravity through the twisties…
    soaring down the straight-aways…
    or turning heads wherever you go…
    You are the master of asphalt and traction.
    Acceleration, is your middle name.
    And when it comes time to give the road a rest, the Spyder RS accommodates your gear
    in ways a motorcycle just can’t imagine.
    Discover riding reinvented. Test ride a Can-Am Spyder RS today.
    Because the wild road, is just waiting to be tamed.

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    This is a :60 motor bike commercial. Kinda fun! Comments, please. Thanks. E

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice really works for this read, and great selection of music bed. At times the recording sounded somewhat muffled, but that could be that I listened to it with my Macbook Pro, and its speakers have a bit to be desired. Only two other thoughts--very small observations--sounded like you dropped the last word of the copy: "tamed" sounded like "tame", I listened twice and the second time I heard that "d" but it does get lost with the music.

    There was a lot of sibilance--of course there are a lot of "s's" in the copy, or maybe some of it can be reduced with a filter in editing.

    But, if I had any hair left on my head, i certainly felt it blowing back when I gave that throttle a flick! Nice read.

    Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    Larry, Thanks for the feedback. Good observations on the sibilance. I've been tweaking the software to get the correct balance - not quite there yet.

    E

    Peer Feedback:

    Oliver's right...in a few spots, you went a little low on the read and the b/g is threatening to become the foreground. Might back off the music just a little or normalize your vocal a bit higher.

    There is noticeable sibilance. Don't know if a de-ess filter will help or maybe backing away from the mic a tiny bit? Maybe lisp?? ;-)

    Larry (Oliver) pointed out some words sounding like you dropped the last little bit...I heard that...and on Rotax...that should be like 'roh-tacks' and not 'roh-tack' that I'm hearing here.

    You're getting better all the time, man...keep it up.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yeah Elton I'd have to agree with the aforementioned criticisms. Just not a polished read (error free). I am though very glad to see a much more consistently controlled delivery in your most recent reads.

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    Spyder RS

    Script:

    There’s a way to tame the wild road…
    it’s called the Can-Am Spyder RS.
    With its dynamic, yet comfortable riding position…
    Confident, three-wheeled stance…
    High-performance Rotax v-twin …
    And sophisticated car technologies for optimal vehicle control….
    The Road will quickly find out who’s boss.
    If it pushes back…
    Give it a flick of the throttle…
    A kick in the gearbox...
    And all Nine-Hundred and Ninety-Eight CC’s of your Spyder RS are ready to put the road in its place…
    whether it’s defying gravity through the twisties…
    soaring down the straight-aways…
    or turning heads wherever you go…
    You are the master of asphalt and traction.
    Acceleration, is your middle name.
    And when it comes time to give the road a rest, the Spyder RS accommodates your gear
    in ways a motorcycle just can’t imagine.
    Discover riding reinvented. Test ride a Can-Am Spyder RS today.
    Because the wild road, is just waiting to be tamed.

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    Second time around with more balls. Still no music, just a raw read but with more feeling. Does it come closer to what you would expect a motorcycle ad to sound like?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Wren, I think the delivery style could definitely work with the product. I'm hearing plosives with a couple of the "P" words. You said "optimum" rather than "optimal. Need to better articulate "...are ready to put the road in its place," and "wild road" sounds like "wile road." Almost there. A rockish music bed would work well with your delivery.

    Peer Feedback:

    Throw a music bed under it and let's hear what it sounds like.

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    Spyder RS

    Script:

    There’s a way to tame the wild road…
    it’s called the Can-Am Spyder RS.
    With its dynamic, yet comfortable riding position…
    Confident, three-wheeled stance…
    High-performance Rotax v-twin …
    And sophisticated car technologies for optimal vehicle control….
    The Road will quickly find out who’s boss.
    If it pushes back…
    Give it a flick of the throttle…
    A kick in the gearbox...
    And all Nine-Hundred and Ninety-Eight CC’s of your Spyder RS are ready to put the road in its place…
    whether it’s defying gravity through the twisties…
    soaring down the straight-aways…
    or turning heads wherever you go…
    You are the master of asphalt and traction.
    Acceleration, is your middle name.
    And when it comes time to give the road a rest, the Spyder RS accommodates your gear
    in ways a motorcycle just can’t imagine.
    Discover riding reinvented. Test ride a Can-Am Spyder RS today.
    Because the wild road, is just waiting to be tamed.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Hi, I'm new to Edge. Thought I'd try my hand at some of the scripts that have been posted by others recently that look like a good challenge. This one is as good a place to start as any. Honest feedback, if you please. Thanks.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Welcome to the Edge forums. You have good vocal clarity if not just a tad to clear in a couple of spots...it comes with practice for just about everyone. The pace was a little odd...the pausing at the end of each sentence was too much to say this was a good smooth read. Almost every sentence was read like the one before it. There was a little variation in the inflections, but not much.

    Mostly: this is about a motorcycle. It's not a cop bike, it's a SPYDER RS!! ( I really don't know that much about bikes, but they're NOT boring!) You really should bring more excitement to the delivery. The read was very level overall...put some testosterone in it!

    Your recording was clear, couldn't really hear anything at all wrong there.

    I just want to hear you put some 'umph' into a commercial for a motorcycle..."Because the wild road is just waiting to be tamed" sounds like it's already tame.

    We all try to be helpful and encouraging here. I hope you don't find what I said rude as I'm really not rude here....other places, sure...just not here. ;-)

    Peer Feedback:

    I definitely Agree with everything you said Tom. Not rude at all. I'll put another one out with the balls it deserves.

    Thanks.

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    Summer Sales Event - Lincoln MKZ Hybrid

    Script:

    Introducing, the new 2012 Lincoln MKZ Hybrid… The most fuel-efficient luxury sedan in America… Voted most dependable entry premium car two years in a row by JD Power & Associates. Right now at the LINCOLN SUMMER EXCLUSIVE sales event, You can lease one for three ninety nine a month… With zero down, zero first payment, and zero due at signing. Only, at your local Lincoln dealer.

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    Trying a new commercial genre, what do you think?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I could hear you doing these types of commercials. The recording quality was a little on the quieter side with some sections sounding kind of muddy. Wasn't much but just took a little away from an overall good recording.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good voice for luxury car commercials. You were a bit slow, and the quality was a tiny bit muddy, but good read nonetheless.

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    The Nissan Leaf

    Script:

    There was a new idea that sparked a revolution. The revolution built an automotive plant - that created a charge - that jolted the battery - that powered the controller - that revved the motor - that engaged the steering- that rotated the wheels - that moved the car - that carried the parents - that picked up the daughter - that told the joke - that made them smile.

    The Nissan Leaf. It’s amazing what an idea can do.

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    Thanks to all for the direction. One take, straight through.

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    Peer Feedback:

    James - this is really nicely done.
    did you say "created the charge"? the script says "created a charge"....
    ;-)
    Maybe there needs to be just a slightly longer pause after the "created a charge"-- it's like the first dominos falling, and it takes a little push to get started -- ahhh, I'm overthinking it....

    I like the flow of the story a lot better in this take, and relaxing the 'ed' endings throughout.

    that's a keeper.
    cheers,
    DS.

    Peer Feedback:

    So much more relaxed in those -ed's! Made it much more pleasant to listen to. Though I feel like you had more fun in Take 2 of the last one, not gonna lie -I got a better video on my head on that one. This was still a quality take, however, well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Self direction is a b!tch.

    Peer Feedback:

    Yup! lol

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    The Nissan Leaf

    Script:

    There was a new idea that sparked a revolution. The revolution built an automotive plant - that created a charge - that jolted the battery - that powered the controller - that revved the motor - that engaged the steering- that rotated the wheels - that moved the car - that carried the parents - that picked up the daughter - that told the joke - that made them smile.

    The Nissan Leaf. It’s amazing what an idea can do.

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    Redux. Thanks to Dave for catching the missing words on the original posting. I was mortified and deleted it, which is exactly what a casting person would do. This is a well crafted piece of copy and I wanted to take a stab at it. 2 takes.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The first read fell into a steady rhythm on the sequences, and did not keep my interest up. The mind slowly tunes out repeated patterns, and the length of this copy makes it difficult to avoid. The second read much was more varied and, therefore, captivating.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mostly agree with Jeffrey, although I liked the delivery of the "smile" line and the tag of the first one. I'd cut those two together, and I would have put the second take first. I really liked the way you hit "new" in the second take.

    And in both takes, each time there was an -ed before "the" it sounded weird to me, like you were trying too hard to hit the past tenses and it plucked the D's a bit too much giving a weird pause before the ("engaged the steering," take 2, is a good example)

    good job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Recording quality is very nice and quiet without echo on my monitor speakers (Equator D5s).

    I agree with the above. Musically you were dialed in and and hitting a similar note in the long list in the first take. Second take engaged me more. Boy, it sure is a talent to voice act through long lists well!

    You sounded a little too much like 'carry-duh the parents' and so I think you just need to relax through the past tense verbs in the list.

    You almost threw away the last line in the second take right at the end. Your 'golden moments' were the 'made them smile' to the end of the first take. Nice emotion there.

    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    Great recordings. I did like the cadence of take 2 better, as it seemed to engage more.

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree that the second take was the better of the 2. However, it was still a bit monotone and lacked the musicality o varying pitch and tone which is needed in long lists like this script has.

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    Toyota Tundra

    Script:

    BIG TOWING. BIG BRAKES. BIG PAYLOAD. BIG AWARD. TOYOTA TUNDRA. 2008 MOTOR TREND TRUCK OF THE YEAR. TOYOTA TUNDRA. When you break into the half-ton truck market, you go big or you go home. Our choice: Go big. That meant giving truckers the capacity they demand from a full-size pickup.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear KentBP's recording

    I tried to find music to mix with this practice but decided to send it dry. What do you think? How do I sound? Thanks for your critique.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! I like your voice for this type of read... deep with a rough grumble, but there were a couple of things that kind of fell flat for me. This script is particularly tough - especially the long list to start things off. Lists like this are difficult to pull off, and it really came off sounding like you were simply reading the items... I couldn't feel the energy that this script calls for. Unfortunately, the lack of energy coming out of the list seems to fill the rest of the read. You also missed the second "you" in "you go big or YOU go home." The word "giving" came across as "givin" in the last sentence.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you very much bwvoice. Your comments are noted and well received.

    Peer Feedback:

    Strong voice! Try saying those first 4 descriptive statements in 4 completely different ways. It will help bring a little life to your read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Will do Andre. Thanks

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    Uber Opportunity and Independence

    Script:

    “Opportunity” :30 TV

    VO: Calling all go-getters. All providers. All self-motivated self-starters.

    VO: A little breathing room is out there.

    VO: It’s around this corner.

    VO And down this road.

    VO: Calling all early birds and night owls. All nine-to-fivers.

    VO: Binge earn while others binge watch. Turn end-of-day into ends meet.

    VO: Calling everyone with big dreams or little mouths to feed.

    VO: Lunchtime is money. Naptime is money. Closing-time is money. Your time is money.

    VO: With Uber, a little drive goes a long way.

    “Independence” :30 DR TV VO: Calling all go-getters.

    VO: All providers. All self-motivated self-starters.
    VO: They drive with Uber.
    MAN: Technically, I’m a chef.
    VO: You get the point.

    VO: She used this...

    VO: ...and signed up here. It was painless.

    MAN: There was no pain involved.

    VO: And now he’s earning four hundred bucks a week.

    MAN: It’s closer to $450.

    VO: And that’s extra buy-you-stuff money. Or buy-them-stuff money.

    VO: Calling all early risers, nine-to-fivers and night owls. VO/SUPER: With Uber—a little drive goes a long way.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The sound is a little hollow. Maybe the quality of the microphone or the processing. It sounds a little metallic, like the over-use of noise reduction or something.

    You fell into the trap that a lot of people make with scripts like these - and it's in the formatting. More than likely, each line is separate line because the other part of the sheet or production storyboard is not there - the video and direction. So you have to imagine what that might be, but the lines have to have connection and flow. How would you have read it if it looked like this?
    ________

    VO: Calling all go-getters, all providers, all self-motivated self-starters. A little breathing room is out there. It’s around this corner and down this road.

    Calling all early birds and night owls, all nine-to-fivers. Binge earn while others binge watch. Turn end-of-day into ends meet.

    Calling everyone with big dreams or little mouths to feed. Lunchtime is money, naptime is money, closing-time is money. Your time is money.

    With Uber, a little drive goes a long way.
    _________

    This is a good example of a "call to action" script. (Heck, how many times is "calling" used?) It's also "lists" within a list of three thought clumps, and those lists within a list all tie together.

    What you're doing is what I call, "Acting The Punctuation". You come full stop at commas, periods and end of lines. And that makes the delivery choppy and disjointed. It also eats up more time than allowed. Each scripts' spec is 30 seconds. The first spot came in at 46 seconds, waaaay too long.

    When you slate and/or give the title of the spot, leave a beat (a slight pause) before going into the body of the copy. Just listening, I couldn't tell with what line the spots actually began. Same thing between two scripts or two takes of the same script. Leave a little space to make them separate entities.

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    48 people have played this

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    Click to hear Amy DuboseVoice.com's recording

    I did a 3 in a row, and really hope you can tell me which one is best. I personally like the first one the most, but please tell me which one was best in your opinion. Any further opinions on anything are more than welcome!

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a bright cheerful voice, but I felt that it wasn't the best match this particular script. For me the flow was just a tad slow and pauses bit long. I think the 'power of German Engineering' should sound more powerful, because German Engineering seems to be a real 'macho' heavy thing (IMHO). The recording quality ok - I did hear your breaths, I usually edit them out so my read is clean. Not sure what the pros feel about this. Hope this helps.

    Peer Feedback:

    "Voltzswagen"? (even my spell corrector didn't like that one).
    Is that a copyright protection, or is this a parody or something?

    You have a nice voice.
    I thought the pace should be much faster. The Jetta is a fun, quick car and the spot should fit the product.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Amy
    I also think the tempo needed to be a bit faster
    To your question which read...... 1st read but again a bit faster and cut some of the pause time out
    sound quality..... good

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you all SO much for the help! I got this Copy off of a commercial that had a picture of a man digging in his pocket, then a woman in her purse then they both look down at the dog (that presumably swallowed the key fob) and the storyteller said "wherever". The pauses were purposeful, however I appreciate the advice to try it as a radio ad. I wouldn't want the pauses in my demo, so you are all right - I will speed up!

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    90 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear raithrovers1's recording

    A little bit of self indulgence here. I absolutely love the original Volvo commercial with Josh Brolin. I thought why the hell not give it a try. If you don't have ambitions of grandeur then you will only reach mediocre heights! Thanks for any feedback as usual.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I'm always curious how there can be 86 listens and NO comments. It's a great read. The music is just a tad too loud for me, but it is well-chosen. I'd put a smile on the last sentence, as it sounds a bit dark for the context. The recording quality sounds good. You've captured the daydream quality of the script well. I'm sold on storyline and am drawn into the read. Well done!

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    2014 Buick Enclave

    Script:

    When everything’s in the right place, you can’t go wrong. Which makes the Buick Enclave such an easy choice. It’s full of features like the IntelliLink voice-activated sound system, the industry’s first front center air bag and available seating for up to 8. Finally, a perfect way to get comfortable with technology. The redesigned 2013 Buick Enclave.
    It’s your kind of luxury. Discover more at buick.com

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    2014 Mercedes E-class

    Script:

    A car that can actually see like a human.
    Using stereoscopic cameras and even stop itself if it has to.
    The technology may be hard to imagine but why you would want it, is not.
    The 2014 E-class.
    It doesn't just see the future...
    It is the future.

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    A Century Of War

    Script:

    Relive the greatest battles of the Twentith Century with A CENTURY OF WAR. This 24-DVD set gives you 85 films and 2400 hours of rare, unedited footage and documentaries from the vaults of the U. S. National Archives. A CENTURY OF WAR. On sale now for only $49.95.

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    A1 Auto Body

    Script:

    Everybody out there is always saying how they can’t find a job ….blah blah blah…Well here’s your chance…a1-auto body works wants to talk to you, if you have experience in body work or auto repair. A1 is looking to hire a class A body technician and a reliable class B mechanic. The pay is great, and there’s a full benefits package for qualified people. You couldn’t ask for nicer people to work for or better working conditions. Because a1 has state of the art equipment…….

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    Acura -- Connection

    Script:

    Make the ACURA CONNECTION, and connect with the style and performance of a winner! Introducing the exciting new line of ACURAs. World class automobiles, unsurpassed in quality, undeniably luxurious, and unbelievably reliable. That’s Acura for 2014. Make the connection!

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    Acura Audio Interface

    Script:

    Quality. Clarity. Sophistication. Simplicity. The New Acura Audio Interface for Ipad. Watch movies, play games or access you music library. Whichever you choose, just got a little easier. You won't have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it. But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder. The Acura Audio Interface for Ipad….ejection seat not included.

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    Acura MDX :10

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    Stay true and let the metal speak.
    The extremely new MDX from Acura.
    Made for Mankind.

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    Acura RDX

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    Variable flow turbo. Instant response for the instant- messaging crowd. The Acura RDX.

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    Acura RL

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    It’s a Sunday afternoon drive along the coast to Carmel. It’s a 3.5-liter, 24-valve, V-6 engine that’s such a work of art, it’s framed and mounted. It’s steering wheel-mounted audio controls let you play Beethoven’s entire Fifth Symphony with one hand. It’s knowing you could buy a Porsche and not needing to. It’s the Acura RL. The true definition of luxury. Yours!

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    Acura RLX

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    Tonight’s forecast, mostly sunny.
    Introducing the Acura RLX with industry-first Jewel Eye LED Headlights. Headlights designed to reproduce sunlight, the spectrum our eyes were literally made to see.
    Other innovations include Precision All-Wheel Steer and a customizable LCD touch-screen.
    It’s luxury, taken to a whole new level.
    The new Acura RLX. Handsomely equipped at $54,450.
    Learn more at acura.com.
    Jewel Eye and Precision All-Wheel Steer are trademarks of Honda Motor Co. Ltd.

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    Acura TL

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    Be there first. Where no sports sedan has been before. The all new 270 horsepower Acura TL. A higher form of performance.

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    Acura TL – Type S

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    The 260 hp Acura TL Type-S. Most cars simply get you from here to there. For those who enjoy the pavement in-between, there's the TL Type-S. It sports a robust 260 hp V-6, laser-quick acceleration, available OnStar service and near-telepathic handling. Thank you, Mr. Cartographer. Call 1-800 To ACURA or visit acura.com

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    Acura – Connection

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    Make the ACURA CONNECTION, and connect with award winning service. Precision craftsmanship...Technicians who fine tune every detail. The ACURA CONNECTION means you’ve connected with the best. The right car, the right price, the right dealer. Make the Connection!

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    Acura – Connection 3

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    Connect with luxury. ACURA for 2014...A new line of luxurious automobiles...The smooth style and dignity of the Legend, the sleek new Integra...Connect with a new level of style and performance. That’s the ACURA CONNECTION...Make the Connection!

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    Acura- SLX

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    It’s taking a deserted road by surprise. It’s the one-touch four-wheel drive that can take you to more remote regions than public television. It’s leaving civilization behind without leaving civilization behind. It’s the Acura SLX. The true definition of luxury. Yours.

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    Acura-Connection

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    Make the Acura Connection,and connect with the style and performance of a winner! Introducing the exciting new line of Acura's World class automobiles,unsurpassed in quality, undeniably luxurious,and unbelievably reliable.That's Acura for 2000.Make the connection.

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    ALAMO CAR RENTAL

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    If you're ever near Durango, Colorado, you'll find a road to the sky...where a hundred years ago, men searched for the silver and gold they saw there. There are over one million miles of roads in Alamo territory, all over America, and every day, with every car nationwide, only ALAMO gives you all those miles for free, including a seventy-mile stretch along route 550 in Colorado, which takes you to the sky

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    Audi

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    It takes more than hard work, dedication and vision to create the truly exceptional. It takes something intangible.
    Something you can't quite put your hands on.
    It's courage, guts, perseverance, passion and fierceness of focus all wrapped into one.
    And it's this intangible characteristic that defines all of us at Audi.
    It's the driving force behind ever pencil line we draw, every calculation we make and every idea we deem not good enough.
    It's why every inch and curve and angle has purpose.
    It's why we test our cars at the highest speeds for hours on end so they can be driven on any surface and in any condition - rain, shine or white - out blizzard.
    It's why substance always wins the day. This is truth in engineering. And this is Audi.

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    Audi

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    Everyday, the world gets more complex
    And this is what inspires us to create new technology
    Technology that connects us to everything the world has to offer, and vice versa
    Technology that makes lightweight stronger, safer and faster than ever before
    Technology that makes electric electrifying, and efficiency exhilarating
    Technology that doesn't just drive us, but drives progress
    And driving progress is what we do every day.

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    Audi :30

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    Everyday, the world gets more complex.
    And this is what inspires us to create new technology.
    Technology that connects us to everything the world has to offer, and vice versa.
    Technology that makes lightweight stronger, safer and faster than ever before.
    Technology that makes electric electrifying, and efficiency exhilarating.
    Technology that doesn't just drive us, but drives progress.
    And driving progress is what we do every day at Audi.

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    Audi Avant A6

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    In Europe, beautiful and elegant wagons are not staging a dramatic comeback. Simply because they never went out of style. Over there, function is never enough. Form matters. Design counts. Maybe that's why the word for stylish wagon is Avant. With its agile four-link front suspension, standard Quattro® all-wheel drive and the 220 hp 3.0 liter V6, a compelling choice. Think true German luxury touring car that just happens to have a bit of extra room. The 2003 Avant A6 by Audi. Luxury. And room to spare.

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    Audi brand film

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    Everyday, the world get more complex
    And this is what inspires us, to create new technology
    Technology that connects us, to everything the world has to offer, and vice versa
    Technology that makes lightweight stronger, safer and faster than ever before
    Technology that makes electric electrifying, and efficiency exhilarating
    Technology that doesn't just drive us, but drives progress
    And driving progress is what we do every day.

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    AUDI-Redux

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    IT TAKES MORE THAN HARD WORK, DEDICATION AND VISION TO
    CREATE THE TRULY EXCEPTIONAL. IT TAKES SOMETHING INTANGIBLE.
    SOMETHING YOU CAN’T QUITE PUT YOUR HANDS ON.
    IT’S COURAGE, GUTS, PERSEVERANCE, PASSION AND
    FIERCENESS OF FOCUS ALL WRAPPED INTO ONE.
    AND IT’S THIS INTANGIBLE CHARACTERISTIC THAT DEFINES ALL OF US AT AUDI.
    IT’S THE DRIVING FORCE BEHIND EVERY PENCIL LINE WE DRAW,
    EVERY CALCULATION WE MAKE AND EVERY IDEA WE DEEM NOT GOOD ENOUGH.
    IT’S WHY EVERY INCH AND CURVE AND ANGLE HAS PURPOSE.
    IT’S WHY WE TEST OUR CARS AT THE HIGHEST OF SPEEDS FOR
    HOURS ON END SO THEY CAN BE DRIVEN ON ANY SURFACE AND
    IN ANY CONDITION – RAIN, SHINE OR WHITE-OUT BLIZZARD.
    IT’S WHY SUBSTANCE ALWAYS WINS THE DAY. THIS IS TRUTH IN ENGINEERING. AND THIS IS AUDI.

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    Audio Interface

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    Quality. Clarity,Sophistication, Simplicity. The New Acura Audio Interface for Ipad. Watch movies, play games or access you music library. Whichever you choose, just got a little easier. You won't have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it. But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder. The Acura Audio Interface for Ipad….ejection seat not included.

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    Audio Interface

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    Audio Interface
    Quality. Clarity,Sophistication, Simplicity. The New Acura Audio Interface for Ipad. Watch movies, play games or access you music library. Whichever you choose, just got a little easier. You won't have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it. But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder. The Acura Audio Interface for Ipad….ejection seat not included.

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    Benzel-Busch Motor Car Corporation

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    For nearly half a century, Benzel-Busch Motor Car Corporation has been defining the way you drive. Family-owned and operated, and one of the Nation’s largest Mercedes-Benz Dealers, Benzel-Busch has maintained a reputation for honesty, integrity and trust among its many valued customers.
    Whether your needs are sales or service related, our My Service approach focuses on your unique needs.
    Visit a Benzel-Busch dealership to meet with your own personal account representative to begin your journey with us today.
    Benzel-Busch. Define the way you drive.

    (script by jamesromick)

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    Benzel-Busch Motor Car Corporation - 2

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    For nearly half a century, Benzel-Busch Motor Car Corporation has been defining the way you drive. As one of the Nation’s largest Mercedes-Benz Dealers, Benzel-Busch has maintained a reputation for honesty, integrity and trust among its many valued customers.
    Visit a Benzel-Busch dealership to meet with your very own personal account representative to begin your journey with us today.
    Benzel-Busch. Define the way you drive.

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    BMW

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    If you could promote yourself to the BMW of your dreams, would you make your move?

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    BMW "Joy"

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    Joy is timeless.
    Joy is a story that has no end.
    Every page is a milestone.
    Every chapter is a breakthrough.
    Innovation may be our backbone, but joy is the heart that carries on the BMW legacy.
    An ongoing tradition from the first car we ever made...to our latest design.
    Joy is never ending.
    The story of joy continues at BMWUSA.COM/JOY.

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    BMW 735i

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    The BMW 735i is one of those rare luxury sedans engineered by driving enthusiasts. While other luxury sedans announce to the world that you’ve arrived, the new BMW 735i offers you the considerable advantage of arriving a bit sooner.

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    BMW Automatic

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    There is a popular notion, albeit misconceived, that a sports car must, by definition, contain a manual stick shift and clutch pedal. That anyone who would think of merely shifting into the “D” position and letting the car do the work must somehow be deprived, never having known the true joy of driving. We’d like to change your mind with the new BMW automatic...the ultimate driving machine. Test drive a BMW at a dealer near you.

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    BMW European Delivery

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    Your first drive in your new BMW doesn't have to go from the lot to your driveway. Meet your vehicle at the renowned BMW Welt, enjoy exclusive VIP
    tours of BMW facilities, take your new vehicle for its first spin across the famed
    Autobahn, choose from five Driving Adventure packages, indulge at world-class
    hotels, and then meet your vehicle back home at the end.

    Taking delivery of your new BMW in Europe will definitely make you smile. So
    will the savings. You may save up to 7 percent of the base Manufacturer Suggested
    Retail Price.

    Picking up your new BMW in Munich is the start of an unbelievable experience.
    The BMW Welt is home to automobile exhibitions, an automobile delivery center
    and an event hub all under one roof. Customers and visitors are provided with a
    closer-than-ever insight into all aspects of the BMW brand, including a factory
    tour, BMW Museum tour, complimentary Delivery Center Café refreshments, and
    more.

    BMW's were made for the mountain-winding, Autobahn-racing, village-skirting of
    modern and historic Europe. So it's only natural you and your new BMW should
    enjoy your first drives here.

    It couldn't be easier to ship your new BMW home at the conclusion of your trip.
    There are 12 convenient drop-off locations throughout Europe. Simply drive your
    car to the location of your choice. The cost of transportation, customs clearance
    and duty, and marine insurance is included in the purchase price of all BMWs sold
    under the European Delivery Program.

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    BMW JOY

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    We are a car company. But we don't just make cars, we make time machines. Build snow castles, and create works of art. We inspire fans and fan clubs. We are efficient and dynamic, we will shape the future.
    We realized a long time ago that what you make people feel, is just as important as what you make.And at BMW we don't just make cars we make joy.

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    Buick Encore

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    Travel + Nimbleness + Flexibility + Luxury + Leisure = the all-new Encore from Buick.
    With luxury features like IntelliLink, an available Bose sound system and flexible cargo space, it’s a nimble crossover that brings a little leisure to all of your travel. Discover more at buick.com.

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    Buick LeSabre

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    Sure, you’re working hard to retire early. But you wouldn’t dream of missing special moments with your children right now. To help you protect your loved ones, LeSabre offers an impressive list of safety features like optional full-range traction control. Because after all, your golden years can be now. LeSabre by Buick. Peace of Mind.

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    Cadilac XTS

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    Introducing the all-new Cadillac XTS. It's revolutionary driver interface brings the simplicity of a tablet to your car. Pacesetting magnetic ride control reads the road up to 1000 times per second. the safety alert seat reimagines the way drivers are warned. Progress in all it's form slows for no one.
    Cadillac XTS bringing the future forward.

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    Cadillac -- Catera

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    It’s good for your heart to jog down the road. And bliss for your soul to zig down it. Thanks to Catera’s full-range traction control system, 200-hp engine, plush leather seating areas, and available Bose stereo system, reaching a state of euphoria is an all gain, no pain experience. Catera. The Caddy that zigs.

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    Cadillac -- Moore

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    Ten years ago, we introduced the idea of providing superior technical service and personal attention to owners of one of the world’s finest motorcars. A lot of things may have changed in those years, but today, more than ever before, your choice of where to purchase a Cadillac remains a simple matter of Moore or less. The Moore Cadillac Company.

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    Cadillac CTS

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    In today’s luxury game, the question isn’t whether your car has available features, like a 40-gig hard drive, pop up Nav screens or any of that. Nope. The real question is when you turn your car on – does it return the favor? The all-new 2008 Cadillac CTS. Life. Liberty. And the Pursuit. Cadillac.

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    Cadillac Escalade Hybrid

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    Check it out. This luxury SUV gets an EPA estimated 20 miles per gallon, city. Better than this Mini Cooper. The 8 passenger Cadillac Escalade Hybrid. Betcha didn't see that coming.

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    Cadillac XTS

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    Predictions seem frivolous when you’ve already seen the future. The Cadillac XTS. A car with so much vision, it captures 12 high-definition photos every second through an available Smart Camera. Using image-mapping software, it scans each one to help alert you to potential danger. Add in the security of a National Highway Traffic Safety Administration 5-Star Overall Vehicle Score for safety, and you’ll be protected ahead of the curve. See how the XTS is bringing the future forward at cadillac.com/xts.
    Cadillac. The Standard of the World.

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    BMW Automatic

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    BMW Automatic
    There is a popular notion, albeit misconceived, that a sports car must, by definition, contain a manual stick shift and clutch pedal. That anyone who would think of merely shifting into the “D” position and letting the car do the work must somehow be deprived, never having known the true joy of driving. We’d like to change your mind with the new BMW automatic...the ultimate driving machine. Test drive a BMW at a dealer near you.

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    Practice Recording:

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    I received a lot of criticism on this piece; because of "pauses" and not having a "smooth" "luxurious" "confident" delivery. I'm curious what you think. I feel sometimes using a "pregnant pause" even when there's not a comma or semi-colon can be a positive thing; adding emphasis. Your thoughts, please.

    /sites/default/files/script-recordings/user-128/BMW_0.mp3

    Professional Feedback:

    Hey Larry,

    Love your tone, and these kinds of spots are good for you. Regarding the pauses, I have to agree that you're using them too frequently. In general, use pauses sparingly because they are often over used. The two big negative results of using them too much: sounding choppy and creating a repetative rhythm (ie predictable and boring). It would be helpful for you to explore other ways of creating variation, interest, life, and character to your performance without using pauses. What if the client asked you to deliver this pausing only briefly after the periods? That would be a fun challenge. Over all, you never want to rely on any one technique too frequently. It's most interesting when we have a healthy combination of elements. Good Luck!

    Professional Feedback by Edge Studio Coach October 20, 2010 at 11:27AM

    Peer Feedback:

    I liked the vocal performance, Larry...but the quality of the vocal was like listening through a paper towel tube or something of that ilk. Something funky going on there. Good musical bed.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey, Tom. Thanks so much for taking the time to offer feedback. This recording was made so long ago; I'm very humbled and honored that folks are still listening to my stuff!! Yes, you are right; that was recorded on my old condenser mic that I had tons of problems with... If you read some of my OTHER critiques, you'll see I was trying to dial in a good patch with it; but eventually gave up and bought a new Yeti Blue mic.... LOVE that thing. I wish you well; would love to hear more feedback from you for some of my other work.

    Kindest regards,

    Larry Gallardo

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    Amtrak Explore America Fares

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    So much beauty in one place! America is a great country, and we've got the best way to see it. Amtrak "Explore America" fares. Round trips from one hundred and seventy nine dollars all across America. It's a great country at a great price. Call 1-800-USA-RAIL now about Amtrak "Explore America" fares.

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    I am passionate about becoming the BEST VO that I can. Thank you so much for offering such a great service. You will be seeing/hearing a lot from me. Concerns: When listening back to my auditions, to me I don't have that special quality that makes me personable. Also, I know about the clicks on the audio. I just changed out my mic cord, so I know it's not that. After I send this to you, I will be changing out my mic.... Aloha, Debbie

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    Nice voice. But the read was a bit too flat. You raised it up at "at a great price'...could have done a little more of that throughout...

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    Amtrak Explore America Fares

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    Amtrak Explore America Fares

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    I'd like a critique on performance and sound quality. How old do I sound? I've been out of the United States for 15 years and am starting over. In this highly competitive field, do you hear any potential in my voice to continue working toward a career in voice over? Thanks, Cindi

    /sites/default/files/Amtrak contest entry from Cindi Huppel 1.mp3

    Peer Feedback:

    A LITTLE sibilant. The read was over-articulated almost throughout. You inflected nicely, but need to loosen slightly on the over-pronouncing and read it as if you were telling your best friend about a great deal. Good sound quality and your voice is nice indeed.

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    Chevrolet - Change That's Smart

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    Chevrolet Change that’s Smart

    Change... It can turn our lives around or upside down. And the only thing we can be sure of, is that change... is inevitable, even when it comes to things like mom's apple pie. We see change all around us... in the clothes we wear, in the movies we watch, and... in the cars we drive.
    At Chevrolet, we're changing for the better, with the introduction of vehicles that are so fuel-efficient, they'll actually pay for themselves over time... vehicles which impact the environment less than any we've ever produced. And that's a good thing, because we think, once you've taken a test drive in a new Chevrolet, that you just might want to hit the road and see the USA again...like you did in the old days.
    But while we're working to change the way you're used to driving, we figured it's best to leave mom's apple pie to mom. Some things, are better left to the experts.
    Chevrolet...Change, that's smart!

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    Hurd/Jaffe
    or Jaffe/Hurd
    or maybe Muddy Richurd

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    Chevy Cavalier

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    Sure, there are plenty of safe cars for your family. Of course, they’re usually so expensive you can kiss the kid’s college fund goodbye. And the vacation. And the...well, you get the picture. Good thing there’s the Chevy Cavalier. It has driver and front-passenger airbags. The safety cage. Even standard anti-lock brakes. And starting at only $12,000, it’s actually affordable. The Chevy Cavalier. The Car More Americans Trust.

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    Chevy Cobalt

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    Introducing the new commotion in the Chevy family. The Cobalt Coup. It’s a sedan and has SS Super Charge. Chevy Cobalt…an American revolution.

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    Chevy Malibu 2

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    Does your car feed you a steady diet of power? Malibu does. Its proven standard V6 engine provides all the confidence you need on the road. 170 horsepower. Smooth performance. A real kick of acceleration. And you don’t have to pay extra for it, like you do on Camry and Accord. All this, plus over 100 other standard features. Chevy Malibu. Power you can depend on.

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    Chevy Silverado

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    We gave it a more powerful Duramax Turbo Diesel and Allison transmission to help it move over 21,000 pounds.
    And then we gave it an advanced exhaust brake system to help it slow down, saving wear and tear on your brakes, and on you.
    With a powertrain backed for 100,000 miles, introducing the new Chevy Silverado HD: Motor Trend's 2011 Truck of the Year.

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    Chevy Tahoe

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    There’s a place I travel when I want to roam, and nobody knows it but me. The roads don’t go there and the signs stay home, and nobody knows it but me. It’s far, far away and way, way afar, it’s over the moon and the sea/and wherever you’re going that’s wherever you are. And nobody knows it but me.

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    Chevy Truck Month

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    You can tell a lot about somebody by looking at their keys. These belong to those who got theirs during Chevy Truck Month.

    Now during Chevy Truck Month qualified buyers can get zero percent APR financing for 72 months on all Silverado half-ton models.

    And to keep your Silverado as dependable as you expect, there’s Chevy Certified Service, only from your dealer, where right now all Chevy owners can get a $60 mail-in rebate on tires, along with our 30-day tire price match guarantee.

    Chevy Truck Month and Chevy Certified Service.

    Visit Chevy.com or your participating Chevy Dealer for more.

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    Chevy Venture

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    It goes from zero to fun in two shakes of a rabbit’s tail. Introducing the Chevy Venture Warner Brothers Edition, a new minivan that took a left turn at Albuquerque and found its way into the hearts of parents everywhere. Only Chevy and Warner Brothers could design this kind of a fun. With its amazing three-way audio controls, flip-down monitor, and built-in video player, you can entertain a small army of kids for miles. And to keep the good times rolling, there’s VentureTainment!, a unique ownership package of ongoing benefits and special privileges from Chevrolet and Warner Brothers.

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    Chrysler

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    In the right hands, iron, steel, and aluminum can be transformed into precious metals. At Chrysler, we have one simple philosophy: to create great cars. It’s about sculpting innovative, influential designs and the quest for engineering excellence. It’s about taking the basic elements and crafting something dynamic, unique and extraordinary. For more information, just call 1-800-CHRYSLER or you can visit our Web site at www.chryslercars.com. Chrysler. Engineered to be great cars.

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    Chrysler 3

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    Is love the first time eyes meet? Or is it a long, developed trust? Either way, everyone should experience it. From the "wow" of our daring designs to the reassurance of quality engineering, each Chrysler has a certain something that is almost indefinable. Kind of like love. For more on our award-winning lineup, call 1-800-CHRYSLER or visit chrysler.com.

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    Chrysler 300C

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    Can Inspiration make your heart stop and your pulse race at the same time? Yes. Can a 340-horsepower HEMI® V8 provide both raw acceleration and intelligent fuel economy? With our MDS system, definitely. And can all this style and engineering be yours for under 33K? Absolutely. The Totally New Chrysler 300C. Chrysler – Inspiration Comes Standard.

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    CSX

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    Everywhere you look, freight trains are part of the economy. By getting goods to market efficiently, CSX is helping move the economy forward. CSX. How tomorrow moves.

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    Das Auto - VW

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    Let more outside in. The all-new Volkswagen Beetle Convertible opens up to the world with the push of a button, and the available 200-hp turbocharged engine makes it hard to come back inside. That’s the Power of German Engineering.

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    Dodge Caravan

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    When you change everything and break the rules, you can expect a reaction. We sure got one. Four Dodge name plates were just named Consumer’s Digest’s Best Buys. So we’re celebrating with a great lease rate on this best buy -- Dodge Caravan. Right now, you can lease a DODGE CARAVAN for zero down and $249 a month. See the friendly Dodge dealer near you. Get zero percent financing at participating dealers.

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    Dodge Magnum

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    Introducing the most powerful production vehicle under 30,000. The all-new Dodge Magnum RT. Open it up and you’ll find the power of a 340-horsepower HEMI V8 engine and the performance of world-class ride and handling. Dodge Magnum. Visit dodge.com today!

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    Dodge Neon

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    Now it’s even easier to take off in a Dodge Neon. After $1,500 cash back, Neon’s just 14 grand for starters, or 16 grand nicely equipped with lots of neat stuff like A/C, automatic, power front windows, power locks and power mirrors. Plus get low 1.9% APR financing for up to 60 months. But you better move quick. They’re going pretty fast these days.

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    Dodge Ram – Sam Elliot

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    A collection of treasures
    lies between these bumpers.

    Legendary engines.

    Industry gold.

    Awards.
    Out the tailpipe.

    And world class warranties
    to back it all up.

    Sounds like you just hit the jackpot.

    Ram.

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    Dodge Ram – Sam Elliot

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    Dodge Ram – Sam Elliot

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    A collection of treasures
    lies between these bumpers.

    Legendary engines.

    Industry gold.

    Awards.
    Out the tailpipe.

    And world class warranties
    to back it all up.

    Sounds like you just hit the jackpot.

    Ram.

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    Dodge SRT-4

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    Under 21 and barely legal. The Dodge SRT-4 is the fastest production car under $21,000. It can accelerate from 0 to 60 in just 5.8 seconds. And, its race-inspired good looks will whiplash necks outside the vehicle. All of which gives it sick street cred. Please visit dodge.com or call 800-4DODGE.

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    Dodge Summer Clearance

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    If you’ve been waiting for just the right moment to buy a new Dodge car or truck, your wait is over. Announcing the Dodge clearance sale, where you’ll find great deals on every ‘14 Dodge in stock. Like low interest rates for qualified buyers. Or cash-back incentives up to $1,500 on select cars. You’ve waited a long time for an event like this. Well now you can’t afford to wait one more minute, because once the 14s are gone, they’re gone. So get to the Dodge clearance sale, before the Dodge you want goes to somebody else. See the friendly Dodge dealer near you.

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    Dodge Trucks

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    Dodge trucks. Fifty foot hairy tarantulas? Alien Armies? No, our competitors fear only one thing- the most powerful line of trucks- including Dakota, Durango and Ram Heavy Duty.
    Two words to other trucks. Nighty, night. For info, visit dodge.com or call 800-4A-DODGE.
    They have starring roles in other trucks' nightmares. Dodge. Grab life by the horns.

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    Dodge Trucks

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    Fifty-foot hairy tarantulas? Alien armies? No, our competitors fear only one thing- the most powerful line of trucks-including Dakota, Durango and Ram Heavy Duty. Two words to other trucks: Nighty, night. For info, visit dodge.com or call 800-4ADODGE.

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    Dodge Trucks

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    When a man has a job to do...
    He’s got to rely on his truck to show up for work...
    He needs Fuel Economy...Power...and Capability
    ...and when a man realizes HIS truck is calling in sick...
    it’s time to think about a Dodge.

    The year end model sale event is going on right now so you can take up to $15,000 off MSRP on select Dodge Trucks. Hurry in to your local Dodge dealer and pick up your new workhand today.

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    Ferrari F12 Berlinetta

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    It is the fruit of a huge amount of work and passion
    and incorporates our most innovative technologies
    working with the best technological partners in the world.

    This is an extraordinarily high performance car.

    It’s 740 horsepower, in fact
    make it the most powerful road car Ferrari has ever built.

    Aside from performance, our other focus was weight reduction.
    Using aluminum to produce a car
    that’s not only more rigid and therefore safer
    but also more compact and very, very light.

    Efficiency was another area in which we concentrated
    And the result is a car that has made huge strides
    in terms of fuel consumption and emissions.

    Each and every detail has been
    meticulously designed and executed.

    It brims with personality and innovative styling
    developed with the aid of intensive wind tunnel testing
    and adopting pioneering solutions.

    The result is a very beautiful car.
    Here is the F12 Berlinetta.

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    Firestone Tires

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    Introducing a car company that’s never made a single car.
    We took the power of a nine year old V-8 and gave it the
    impressive handling of Firestone’s Destination Tire.
    Now, moms agree. Every milk run feels like a victory lap.
    So whatever you drive……drive a Firestone.

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    Ford

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    Ford F Series Pickups
    It's easy to see why Ford has the top selling pickup truck in America. Because, when you look into a Ford, you'll find innovation, attention to details, and exceptional value - qualities that have made the Ford F Series America's best selling truck for 19 straight years.
    With this kind of success, the next thing you'll see when you look into a Ford pickup might just be yourself. Have you driven a Ford lately?

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    Ford Explorer (Edited for :30)

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    Tom and Sally worked hard to get where they are. Now that they’ve “arrived”, all they want is to get the heck out. So, last weekend they traded business talk for a babbling brook and conference calls for conifer pines. They aimed their new Ford Explorer Sport toward the country, took turns driving, and sang out loud whenever they felt the urge. The new 2014 Ford Explorer Sport. Well-equipped at just $25,000.

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    Ford Freestar

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    The all new Ford Freestar. If you haven't looked at Ford lately. Look again.

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    Ford Mustang

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    Ever since Nick turned sixteen, twenty years ago, not a single day has passed without his name on the title of a mustang. To him it’s not just a car. It’s the car. For Nick and an entire generation, the name alone conjures up images of open road, dark sunglasses, and a black rubber signature. The allure is mystical. And since ’64, Mustang has always kept its promise of power, freedom, and outright rage against convention. Just ask Nick.

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    Ford Mustang 2

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    They don't make cars like they used to. We do. Ford Mustang. If you haven't looked at Ford lately... Look again.

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    Ford Mustang LX Convertible

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    There’s something new under the sun ... a quick way to catch a few rays. This year, the FORD MUSTANG LX CONVERTIBLE is more fuel-efficient than ever, so you can spend less time at the pump and more time fueling your spirit! Just drop the top ... and get set for a sun-shining performance. With the MUSTANG LX. Have you driven a Ford lately?

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    Ford Practice

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    Ford F Series Pickups
    It's easy to see why Ford has the top selling pickup truck in America. Because, when you look into a Ford, you'll find innovation, attention to details, and exceptional value - qualities that have made the Ford F Series America's best selling truck for 19 straight years.
    With this kind of success, the next thing you'll see when you look into a Ford pickup might just be yourself. Have you driven a Ford lately?

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    Ford Scion

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    It’s a car that boasts as much personality as special features. Get to know a real character. The Scion tC – from Ford.

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    Ford Taurus

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    Ford introduces the all new Taurus, for those who want to have it all and take it all with them. For those who have an eye for design and a passion for performance. And for those who want the latest in safety, including standard dual air bags and available anti-lock brakes, the all new Ford Taurus Wagon. For those whose dreams are a little bigger.

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    Ford ZX2

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    Why wait for a change in scenery, when you can make your own? Attitude. Ford ZX2. Built to last.

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    General Motors -- People In Motion 2

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    There was a time when people couldn’t chase their dreams any further than a good horse could carry them. When men and women who wanted to see the world spent days just getting to the next town. Driving changed all that. It frees us from the constraints of place. We go where we want, when we want. General Motors. People in Motion.

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    GMC Sierra 2

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    The Sierra crew cab doesn't just offer more horsepower,more towing,more payload and more torque than Ram or Tundra. Sierra offers a locking rear differential which locks when Ram & Tundras limited slip...slips. Never Send A Truck To Do A Man's Job. The 2010 GMC Sierra. May the best truck win.

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    Go Mobile

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    Introducing “Go Mobile”

    Nice Bus’ new mobile ticketing app

    It puts a vending machine right in your pocket

    You can buy tickets anywhere at any time

    You no longer have to worry about finding a metro card, or fumbling for coins to pay your fare

    “Go Mobile” is easy

    Choose your ticket type

    Enter your payment information

    And you’re done

    As the bus is arriving, press “use ticket”

    And then show your phone to the driver

    Its quick and simple, and makes paying your fare a breeze

    Download “Go Mobile” today

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    Goldilocks Audi

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    SPEC: read should resemble a fairy tale.

    Once upon a time, very recently, a successful businesswoman named Goldilocks was in the market for a luxury car.

    First, she test-drove the big luxury sedans from Japan and Germany – and found them too soft.

    Next, she tried a racy driving machine, and, alas, found it too hard.

    Then Goldilocks visited her local Audi dealer and drove an A series sedan. Much to her delight, Goldilocks found the Audi to be – you guessed it – just right.

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    Have It All

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    You always thought some day would be your day.
    The day you could afford to drive in style
    The day you'd reward yourself for all the hard work
    With a machine that performs at the same level you do
    Today is your day.
    Fire up the engine of your new BMW.
    Have it all.
    BMW performance. BMW excitement.
    Starting at just 38 thousand.
    Reward yourself. BMW
    Bema dot BMW dot C-A

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    Honda

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    Ya know, the other day I was telling my wife about this incredible deal I found on a new Honda, and all she could say was, “We can’t afford a new car.” So then I start telling her about how much car you can get for so little money. And she says, “Not cheap enough.” Then I mention the air conditioning, air bags, and even a Sirius Radio. So what does she say?...You guessed it. But then when I mentioned the price...she actually smiled. Honda...it has everyone smiling.

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    Honda (2)

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    Ya know, the other day I was telling my wife about this incredible deal
    I found on a new Honda, and all she could say was “We can’t afford a new car”. So then I started telling her about how much car you can get for so little money. And she says “Not cheap enough”. Then I mention the air conditioning, air bags, and even a CD Player. So what does she say?...You guessed it! But then when I mentioned the price...she actually smiled. Honda...it has everyone smiling.

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    Honda Accord

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    I remember my first new car… I met more cute guys when that clunker would die on the highway. Then there was my subcompact. Stalled at the mere site of a rain cloud. Next thing some gorgeous hunk pulls over to help. I met Harold on route 9. Vinny on the turnpike. Now I’ve got a Honda Accord. 85,000 miles without a hitch. Ooooohhh boy am I lonely.

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    Honda Civic

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    Getting a new car is a good thing. Getting a brand new Honda Civic with impressive savings on features like air conditioning, Sirius Radio and center storage console is an even better thing. So go see your Honda dealer today and ask for the Civic Value Package.

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    Honda Civic 2

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    At this moment you can get a reliable Honda Civic and save on options like air conditioning, a Sirius Radio, and a center storage console. The Civic value package from Honda. Get yours before time runs out.

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    Honda Civic Hatch

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    Ladies and Gentlemen. May I have your attention please. I’d like to welcome you all to the first release in Honda’s new Earth Dreams technology series. Stylish design with substance!…..now, there’s a clever thought. We like to think of it as getting the best of both worlds - Sleek and sporty coupe-like styling, but with the added practicality of 5 doors and Magic Seats that adjust to suit your lifestyle. How good is that eh! Plus soon, you’ll have the choice of a new 1.6 litre turbo diesel engine that delivers a remarkable balance of fuel economy and performance. Ladies and Gentlemen. Clever thinking at its best! ….The Honda Civic Hatch.

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    Honda Pilot

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    Up here, the vehicle closest to the North Pole has the right-of-way. Even with a 240-hp engine, a 4-wheel drive system and a quadruple 5-star safety rating, it’s good to be courteous. The new Pilot from Honda.

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    Honda Thinking

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    You are what you drive. Or so the saying goes. Which brings us to the new LEV Accord from Honda. LEV is short for Low-Emission Vehicle. Which means the folks who live in your neighborhood will come to the only logical conclusion...you’ve made a responsible decision to drive the new low-emission LEV Accord.

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    Hummer H2

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    Sometimes a good offense is a really good offense. The new H2. From Hummer. Like nothing else.

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    Hyundai Equus

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    Close your eyes and picture a vehicle exterior that expresses beauty and elegance. Inside, envision the rich comfort and innovative features that enhance every ride. OK? Now open your eyes.
    Surprised?
    The all new Hyundai Equus is waiting for you.
    With Hyundai Assurance Connected Care and America’s Best 10-Year/100,000-Mile Warranty.
    Finally, a vehicle that doesn’t compromise taste for affordability.

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    Hyundai Super Bowl Commercial

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    Edmunds dot com said "Hyundai just might take over the world with this thing".
    Car and Driver dot com exclaimed "Just call it impressive."
    And Motortrend dot com added "this could be America's next best seller."
    All of that, before any of them saw this.
    [price appears on screen]
    Presenting the two hundred horsepower, thirty five miles per gallon...
    Hyundai Sonata.
    And you can quote us on that.

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    Infiniti

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    The new Q45 from Infiniti. The elegance of hand-selected leather and a perfectly tailored cabin. The performance of an aggressive V6 engine and road-hugging Vehicle Dynamic Control System. All that’s missing is a racing suit from Milan. Infiniti. Accelerating the future.

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    Infiniti 2

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    They said an SUV would never have the heart of a sports car. They said an SUV would never turn heads. Or give directions. Or play movies. They were wrong. The 315-horsepower Infiniti FX. Rethink the SUV at Infiniti.com.

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    Infiniti FX

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    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti FX

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    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti FX

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    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, and follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti FX

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    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti FX

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    Design is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti FX-45

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    Here’s to being unlabeled, unclassified and unconventional. To fusing sized and performance. To having the power of a 315-horsepower V8. To being an S-squared U-V, with exponentially more sport, and utility when you need it. Here’s to the FX45. (Infiniti. Accelerating the future.)

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    Infiniti FX-A

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    IDesign is the new luxury. It’s what makes Infiniti the most progressive car company in the world. It has the power to transform the functional into the emotional. It fuels innovation. It fuels performance. And it fuels us to create objects that are as powerful and beautiful as they are provocative. At Infiniti, form follows function, follows no one. The 340-horsepower FX. From Infiniti.

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    Infiniti M

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    Have you ever driven a car with air conditioning that creates calming breezes?
    Have you driven a car that has pure silver dust hand polished into the wood?
    Of course you haven't. Because it's never been a car. But the all new Infiniti M.
    This is inspired performance. This is the way of Infiniti.

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    Infiniti M Hybrid

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    Uncompromised power and Efficiency the 2014 Infiniti M Hybrid
    Inspired by nature, we crafted a hybrid featuring the harmonious coexistence of graceful power and quiet efficiency.
    Introducing the only vehicle delivering more than 350 hp and 30 mpg.
    Crafted to deliver signature Infiniti performance the Infiniti Direct Response Hybrid system features a 1 motor, 2 clutch parallel hybrid power train that lets you experience all 360 horsepower allowing you to take your Infiniti M Hybrid from 0 to 60 mph in less than 6 seconds.
    The 2014 Infiniti M Hybrid. visit you local Infiniti dealer, or infintiusa.com for more information.

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    Infiniti--Inspired Performance

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    When machines start driving machines we'll consider a change.

    Computers can measure performance. But computers can't feel. They don't have a pulse.

    Which is why Infiniti has a Master Driver, recognized by the Ministry of Japan for his extraordinary skill.

    His sole job is to provide engineers with human feedback.
    Emotional feedback.

    One drive in a G Sedan, Coupe, Convertible, or the new G25 Sedan, and you'll instantly feel the exhilarating difference he makes.

    This is inspired performance.

    This is the way of Infiniti.

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    Infinity 2

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    They said an SUV would never have the heart of a sports car. They said an SUV would never turn heads. Or give directions. Or play movies. They were wrong. The 315-horsepower Infiniti FX. Rethink the SUV at Infiniti.com.

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    Jaguar

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    There are Machines that can do things for us.
    Machines that can make things for us.
    Machines that can see right through us.
    And Machines that want to be us.
    Want to replace us
    But they are not us.
    There is one machine that makes us greater.
    A machine that’s so instinctive,
    So seductive,
    It’s as alive as we are.
    It doesn’t click….
    Or buzz.
    (Engine starts)
    It roars.
    Jaguar.

    Contributed by Richurd

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    Jaguar

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    I was born fast. Faster than those who would challenge me. I was born strong. Quiet in confidence. And blessed with might. I was born with instinctive quickness. Quick to recognize. To adapt. To respond. Quick to be quick. I was born to be seen by everything but the wind. I was born at the beginning of the last century, but I am undoubtedly of the next century. I am Jaguar. Born to perform.

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    Jaguar (S-Type)

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    Can you resist? The power to turn a quick glance into a lasting stare. Breathtaking good looks. Luscious handcrafted appointments. Bluetooth wireless phone technology. The incredible performance of a 390-hp supercharged V8 engine. Maybe those hairs on the back of your neck are trying to tell you something. The new S-Type Jaguar.

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    Jaguar SE1200

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    Elegant. Luxurious. Magnificent...and affordable. The all new SE1200 from Jaguar. Sophistication...simplified.

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    Jeep 4x4 Zamboni

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    The legendary Zamboni ice resurfacer dramatically improved the sports of hockey and figure skating. When the first production version hit the rinks in 1950, it was built on the chassis of a Jeep 4x4--another legendary vehicle that knows a thing or two about performance on slippery surfaces. Great things are built into every Jeep 4x4. And, as Zamboni proved back in 1950, sometimes great things are built on them as well. Jeep. There's only one.

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee -- it’s tough, sporty, yet sophisticated. It’s the go-anywhere, do-anything, see-and-be-seen vehicle. Jeep’s state-of-the-art 4-wheel drive is like no other and it sports one of the most powerful engines in its class. In fact, the Jeep Grand Cherokee is so fully equipped, you won’t need anything...except a road. Jeep Grand Cherokee...you can take that to the bank ... or even up the Grand Canyon.

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee

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    Over six decades ago we entered the civilian market and gave the people what they wanted: doors. Then, a roof. And some seatbelts. Pretty soon we got carried away. We added u-connect GPS and a more comfortable on-road ride. Throw in a couple rain-sensing wipers and you’ve got the new Jeep Grand Cherokee.

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee Laredo

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    Maybe it's the unmatched luxury and capability. The fuel economy and Grand Cherokee styling. Or the improved V-6 performance and fuel efficiency. If you've been looking to feel the freedom of a new Jeep vehicle, there's no reason to hold back. You have the power. And where you'll find it is within. During the Independence Day event, well-qualified lessees can sign and drive Grand Cherokee Laredo 4 X 2 for $379-a-month.

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee Laredo

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    Maybe it's the unmatched luxury and capability. The fuel economy and Grand Cherokee styling. Or the improved V-6 performance and fuel efficiency. If you've been looking to feel the freedom of a new Jeep vehicle, there's no reason to hold back. You have the power. And where you'll find it is within. During the Independence Day event, well-qualified lessees can sign and drive Grand Cherokee Laredo 4 X 2 for $379-a-month.

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    Jeep Grand Cherokee Laredo

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    Maybe it's the unmatched luxury and capability. The fuel economy and Grand Cherokee styling. Or the improved V-6 performance and fuel efficiency. If you've been looking to feel the freedom of a new Jeep vehicle, there's no reason to hold back. You have the power. And where you'll find it is within. During the Independence Day event, well-qualified lessees can sign and drive Grand Cherokee Laredo 4 X 2 for $379-a-month.

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    John Deere - Get a Load

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    What do you want to get done today?
    Wanna take the loader off? Bing Bang Boom
    Need to connect the mower deck?
    Oh look...you just did.
    The one family sub-compact tractor with dozens of attachments...only from John Deere.
    Now, how can you top that tomorrow.
    That's how we run...and nothin' runs like a Deere.

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    John Deere - I Run

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    I run hard.
    I run fast.
    I run more...and leave less.
    I run because price is negotiable...value is not.
    And after one hundred seventy five years,
    The name and the values are still the same.
    I run because it's not just about the iron.
    Day or night...I never run alone.
    I run for him...for me...and for them.
    I run John Deere...because nothing runs like a Deere.

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    John Deere - Land

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    You always dreamed of living in a place like this,
    But the land can be challenging.
    That's where our expertise comes in.
    Your John Deere dealer will find the best solution,
    To get the most for your money,
    And the most out of your property...
    Because we know you love your land...every last bit of it.
    That's how we run...and nothin' runs like a Deere.

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    John Deere - Shorcuts

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    When you take shortcuts it shows, we don't run like that.
    We build John Deere equipment the way we always have, the right way.
    Times change, our principles don't.
    You don't just have our work on it... we've got our name on it.
    That's how we run.
    Nothing runs like a Deere!

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    Kawasaki Motorcycles

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    If you’ve been waiting for big, you just struck the mother lode. Introducing our new flagship, the Vulcan 2000, featuring the largest production liquid-cooled V-twin ever. It’s the newest member of an exclusive group of bikes that also includes the Vulcan 1600 Mean Streak, a combination of cruiser comfort and sportbike handling. Or choose the classic styling of the Vulcan 1500 Nomad with hard bags and a ride that’ll make you wish the long road ahead were even longer. For more information call 1-800-661-RIDE or visit Kawasaki.com Kawasaki – Let the good times roll.

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    Kia Sedona

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    The Kia Sedona, It's the minivan with the governments highest safety rating and the lowest price. Visit your New York, New Jersey and Fairfield County Kia Retailers, Hurry.

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    Land Rover

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    Walk into a Land Rover retailer, and you'll find that the experience of buying or having a vehicle serviced with Land Rover really is different. Refreshing, some say. We promise that it's not just rhetoric. We want your experience in a Land Rover Centre to be memorable, entertaining and productive.

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    Land Rover - Range Rover

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    World Leaders. Royal Families. Pop Stars. The Pope. Our Demographic. For over half a century, Land Rovers have been transporting very important people to very important places. Peace summits. Coronations. Sold-out concert venues. And somewhere between Winston Churchill and the Pope, it occurred to us; If we’re going to be carrying luminaries, shouldn’t we lavish them in absolute comfort and style? And so we created our first Range Rover.

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    Lexus ES

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    The road to perfection is not paved with asphalt. It is formed from equal parts curiosity, passion and ambition. The new E-S from Lexus. A new look. Intuitive technology. An inspired ride. While perfection is not the right road for everyone, for us it’s a daily commute. The Lexus E-S. The passionate pursuit of perfection

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    Lexus GS

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    At Lexus, we believe that luxury should never be compromised for sportiness. And vice versa. Which is why the Lexus GS is 100% of both. Sports car or luxury car? Let your senses be the judge. The Lexus GS 430.

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    Lexus IS

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    You’ve never been a big fan of making decisions by the numbers. Whether it’s horsepower, calorie counts or Twitter followers, you always prefer to feel things out. Here’s a good rule of thumb. Things should feel “Amazing”! Introducing the 2014 Lexus IS. The perfect blend of performance and precision. Available at you local Lexus dealer now or visit Lexus.com.

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    Lexus LE

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    This Lexus LE costs under 30 grand, which is pretty remarkable when you consider it has things like an automatic transmission, air, stereo, power steering, anti-lock brakes, and a whole lot more...but what’s really surprising about Lexus is that we’ve managed to keep it priced that low...even allowing for inflation. So test drive a Lexus LE at a dealer near you.

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    Lexus LX450

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    The new Lexus LX450 comes equipped with full-time four-wheel drive, a powerful, high-torque engine, and class-leading ground clearance. Yet, it comes with amenities such a leather-trimmed interior, multi-adjustable power front seats and an automatic climate control system. It even has seating for seven. And if all that doesn’t impress a mountain, perhaps riding over it a few times will. To test-drive the LX450, simply visit your local Lexus dealer.

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    Lincoln LS 2

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    Luxury is more than a hood ornament. It’s a feeling you get when you’re living by your own rules. It’s knowing that sometimes the best thing about a 3.9 litre 32-valve V8 is that it gets you to a place where you can slow down faster. The new LS from Lincoln.

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    Lincoln MKZ Hybrid Summer Sales Event

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    Introducing, the new 2014 Lincoln MKZ Hybrid… The most fuel-efficient luxury sedan in America… Voted most dependable entry premium car two years in a row by JD Power & Associates. Right now at the LINCOLN SUMMER EXCLUSIVE sales event, You can lease one for three ninety nine a month… With zero down, zero first payment, and zero due at signing. Only, at your local Lincoln dealer.

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    Lincoln Navigator

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    Tread luxuriously. Tread lightly and luxuriously in Lincoln Navigator, the world’s most powerful SUV. Tread spaciously too. Navigator has room for seven in three rows of leather-trimmed seats. Call 800-688-8898, or see an authorized Lincoln Navigator dealer. Lincoln Navigator, American Luxury

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    Lincoln Town Car

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    Remember the “Back to Basics” movement? Neither do we. Lincoln Town Car. What a luxury car should be.

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    Mazda MPV

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    If you could peer into the soul of the newest Mazda, what would you see? The new 200 horsepower Mazda MPV. The body of a minivan, the soul of a sportscar.

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    Mazda Racing

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    A carbon-fiber tub, six-speed sequential gearbox, and zero-to-60 in 2-point-9 seconds. Now that sounds like a race care. The new Pro Formula Mazda race car is starting a revolution in racing, using the same Renesis rotary engine that powers the 2004 Mazda RX-8. It’s the same high-rev rotors. Same 6-port induction system. The same of virtually everything. No wonder it was named International Engine of the Year. You can watch the 2004 Star Mazda North American Championship Series presented by Goodyear this spring on SpeedChannel. Learn more about the Star Mazda Series at StarMazda.com, or the Renesis rotary engine at www.MazdaUSA.com-slash-performance.

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    Mercedes - What is Performance?

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    What is performance? Zero to Sixty or Sixty to Zero? How a car performs a quarter mile or a quarter century? Is performance about the joy of driving or the importance of surviving?
    To us performance is not about doing one thing well ... it is about doing everything well .. because in the end everything matters.
    Performance without compromise.
    That is what drives us.

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    Mercedes -- E-class

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    Yes, another morning ... another trip to the office. But in the new MERCEDES E-CLASS, you’re in one of the safest cars on the road. You’re inside a protective cage ... with front airbags ... and, get this, side airbags. Heaven knows ... there are animals on these roads. MERCEDES E-CLASS, beginning at $39,000. Visit your local Mercedes dealer today.

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    Mercedes Benz

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    Hey. You don’t have to climb Mount Everest or get lost in the Canadian wilderness to escape to a cold, steely grip of reality. Just get behind the wheel of the new M Class from Mercedes. 0-60mph in 4.3 seconds.

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    Mercedes Benz 3

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    It’s everything you’ve ever imagined. With its intercooled, supercharged 2.3 liter Kompressor engine, curve-hugging Electronic Stability Program and nimble Brake Assist, your visions of the open road will all come true. We understand. We live here too. Mercedes Benz.

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    Mercedes Benz C-Class

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    Why did we give the new C-class almost 260 pounds of torque? Why did we equip it with Blue-tooth, Serius satellite radio, and a surround sound system? And why did we engineer every component to perform at Autobhan speeds? Why, because we promised you a Mercedes Benz, that’s why.

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    Mercedes E-class

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    A car that can actually see like a human using stereoscopic cameras and even stop itself if it has to.
    The technology may be hard to imagine but why you would want it is not.
    The 2014 E-class it doesn't just see the future it is the future

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    Mercedes-Benz 2014 S-Class

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    It is the pinnacle of automotive performance and engineering.

    Perfection to the very last detail.

    It is the essence of luxury.

    With a host of new systems that combine safety and comfort.

    It is the sophistication found only in a Mercedes-Benz.

    Introducing the All-New 2014 S-Class.

    The Best or Nothing.

    (Script correction - 4th sentence)

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    Mercedes-Benz 2014 S-Class

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    It is the pinnacle of automotive performance and engineering.

    Perfection to the very last detail.

    It is the essence of luxury.

    With host of new systems that combine safety and comfort.

    It is the sophistication found only in a Mercedes-Benz.

    Introducing the All-New 2014 S-Class.

    The Best or Nothing.

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    Mercury

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    The new 2014 Mercury Sable has foot pedals that move forward and backward at the push of a button. Plus airbags that adjust to your height, shock-absorbing safety belts and other smart ideas that make the new sable one highly accommodating automobile. Mercury - live life in your own lane.

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    Metro North Railroad

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    Train travel is becoming more convenient then ever, because there’s frequent service from places like the Bronx and lower Westchester, to places like White Plains, New Rochelle, and Stamford. It’s fast, dependable, inexpensive, and best of all...your train time is your own time. You can rest, read, catch up on work, or think of all that traffic you’re missing. For rail and connecting bus schedules and rates, call 1-800-metroinfo. This has been Train Talk. Brought to you by MTA Metro North Railroad. Going your way.

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    Metropool

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    If you had to pay every time you pulled out of your driveway, you’d think twice before you got into your car, wouldn’t you? Well, if you drive to and from work alone, you are paying a price. In fact, when you add up all the expenses, riding alone could cost you up to $10 a day...$250 a month...up to $3,000 a year! So...ride together and save. Call METROPOOL at 1-800-ALL-RIDE.

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    Metrorail

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    Washington’s an important town. Washington can also be...a tense town. You know it. You work in it. There’s a hassle-free way to reduce the stress of Washington’s non-stop pace...Take Metrorail to work, from wherever you live. We’ll whisk you away in comfort, and get you there in a flash...You’ll arrive relaxed, and ready to go. So, take Metrorail, and...Take it easy!

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    Midas - Never Bet on a Horse

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    Never bet on a horse named “Tripod.” Never go cliff diving with a guy named “Cliff” -- it’s just too many cliffs. Never play leapfrog with a unicorn. And never trust a car that hasn’t been treated to Midas.

    Save on brakes, tires, maintenance and total car care. For a car you can depend on long after the warranty expires. You deserve the Midas Touch.

    Get a comprehensive oil change, tire rotation and visual brake check for 19.99 Up to five quarts conventional oil. Shop fees extra. Most vehicles at participating Midas.

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    30 second radio spot. Read “nineteen ninety-nine” for the price.

    Contributed by TxTom

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    Midas - Never Play Poker

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    Never play poker with a guy named Lucky. Never hit a piñata that has hornets coming out of it. Never wear a fanny pack...no really..don’t ever wear a fanny pack. And never trust a car that’s never been trusted to Midas.

    Save on brakes, tires, maintenance and total car care. For a car you can depend on long after the warranty expires. You deserve the Midas Touch.
    Get a comprehensive oil change, tire rotation and visual brake check for 19.99 Up to five quarts conventional oil. Shop fees extra. Most vehicles at participating Midas.

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    30 second radio spot. Read “nineteen ninety-nine” for the price

    Contributed by TxTom

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    Nissan Model Year End

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    It's the end of the model year...
    and Nissan is laying it all on the line.
    The bottom buying sales event is back.
    Get the bottom line, on our full line.
    Special zero percent financing...
    or a one-seventy-nine a month lease on Altima.
    For more offers, visit choose nissan dot com.
    Hurry in to a dealer today;
    These savings won't last...
    and THAT's the bottom line.

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    Nissan Model Year End 2014

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    It’s Nissan’s Model Year-End Sales Event... and we’ve got better availability of vehicles than Honda or Toyota. So you can save NOW. Get up to fifteen-hundred back on Altima... or save 1275 on Rogue. Visit choose nissan dot com. Test drive at your local Nissan dealer today. More cars... Great offers. THAT’s the bottom line.

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    Nissan Tent Event

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    It's an event so big, we couldn't keep it all inside.
    Nissan's National Tent Event is back.
    Now, get 500 holiday bonus cash on select models, on top of existing offers.
    Like a 179 a month lease on Altima.
    Plus 500 bonus cash.
    Visit choose Nissan dot com or test drive at your local Nissan dealer today.
    Hurry, bonus cash ends May 31st.

    **note, this is a :30 spot.

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    Nissan Xterra

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    If necessity is the mother of invention, the Xterra is its dirt-covered poster boy. So in addition to the available 210-hp, SuperCharged V6, you’ll also find lots of heavy-duty stuff at your disposal. After all, you never know when a ladder-box truck frame and maximum 5,000-pound towing capacity will come in handy. The Nissan Xterra: A million uses and counting.

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    Norfolk Southern Silicon

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    Today, business is composed of two worlds:
    One of brick and mortar, the other, a digital reality.
    And as these worlds continue to grow, one company will be right there.
    Delivering the products and materials needed for success.
    From the steel that builds our cities, to the silicon that builds our networks,
    Norfolk Southern. Moving the goods that move the economy.

    ***note: :30 spot

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    Porsche 944 Turbo

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    For lunch, The Porsche 944 Turbo generally prefers Farraris. although it has been known, occasionally, to snack on Corvettes.

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    Porsche Cayman

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    Live by the Code of the Curve.
    By right-foot intuition.
    By a desire for exhilaration around every turn.
    By the track-bred prowess known as the new Porsche Cayman.

    With a lighter body,
    mid-engine dynamics,
    increased horsepower,
    re-tuned PDK transmission for lightning-fast shifting
    and acceleration from 0 to 60 in 5.4 seconds,
    you’ll never see a curve the same way again.

    Unlock the Code of the Curve with a test drive.

    The new Porsche Cayman.

    Porsche. There Is No Substitute.

    (script by jamesromick)

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    Porsche Panamera

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    Introducing the New Porsche Panamera. The first true sports car that’s also a luxury sedan. Elegantly crafted leather seats, a remarkably spacious cabin and a sleek ascending center console provide executive class comfort. But step on the accelerator, and the best in class performance and handling are undeniably present. In short, the Porsche Panamera is the world’s most thrilling contradiction. Experience it for yourself, with a test drive. Porsche. There Is No Substitute.

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    Acura Audio Interface

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    Quality. Clarity. Sophistication. Simplicity. The New Acura Audio Interface for Ipad. Watch movies, play games or access your music library. Whichever you choose, just got a little easier. You won’t have to have a degree in rocket science to use it, install it, or even enjoy it. But your passengers will think you did, so getting them out of your car, just got a little harder. The Acura Audio Interface for Ipad….ejection seat not included.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great voice! I think it fits the script well. From what I can hear, the audio quality is just a bit noisy. The pacing is good, the emotion and inflection is good at the beginning and end but can use a bit of a lift in the middle. I look forward to hearing you on the real commercial!

    Peer Feedback:

    You've got a nice relaxed tone. sounds great. But I wanted to see more connection in some of the phrasing. Commas do not mean your tone must go down. Try pausing, but keep the tone up at the end of these phrase so you connect with the next part of the thought: "whichever you choose.." and "out of your car". You have a smooth voice, so if you can work on that technique you can sound really classy, yet relaxed. Just a thought for what it's worth.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good first submission.

    However, what I'm hearing is a clean music bed and a not so clean vocal track. The mix is off. My suspicion is that your recording environment is less than optimal - meaning not so dead quiet. Lots of plosive popping as well.

    The first four words have four distinctively different meanings, but they sounded like you were rattling off a laundry or grocery list if inanimate objects rather than descriptives.

    There are also at least 3 different "lists" in the copy, but you seemed to steam roll over them.

    Good for you to realize that this is a :30 spot - and it is a boat load of copy to fit into that time frame and not feel rushed. Big challenge.

    Peer Feedback:

    Seemed very rushed and the background music played a big part in that. The tempo made me feel like you were in a hurry. In addition the music drowned out your voice. I recommend you find a slower tempo music and slow your read. Right out of the gate Quality. Clarity. Sophistication. Those 3 words should define the rest of the read, but in this case the speed in which you have read them set the table for the remainder of the text. Your voice is a good fit for this commercial though.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with James.
    nice spot, but the VO track wasn't clean - room noise, pops, and some mouth clicks. That's easy enough to fix.

    If I were the engineer, I would've tightened up "...out of your car...just got a little harder." the pause seemed a little choppy. but that's nit picking (I had to come up with something that James didn't mention....lol)

    cheers!
    DS

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    Nice resonant voice, with room to grow. The pacing was too fast. Acura attracts hard working people who like to settle in comfort and style. Consider speaking to that person as they are rushing out of work (late) and into their car to pick up some good friends. They are excited about getting into their piece of joy and comfort on the way home, and making it fun for others.

    Lastly, the music selection is waaaay off for this piece. Too upbeat. The music needs to be confident sounding, powerful, yet not overpowering. I'd focus on nailing the voice. It's the words more than the music that will sell. Put another way... words delivered properly are music.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for all of comments. It is much appreciated. I did radio years ago and was interested in doing voiceovers again. Since then I've done a lot of dance music production. I see that some of the techniques used to sweeten a singer's voice may not work for voiceovers. I am guilty of letting my tone go down with a comma, music selection is everything - that's why they already have the bed selected/made before the voiceover artist comes in; I definitely need to purchase a windscreen; and I never thought to look at it as three constructed lists. Again, thanks for the feedback!!
    Don

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TomJVoiceover's recording

    Thanks for the feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi TomJVoiceover,
    I think your voice and this script are a nice marriage. Very nice. On the tail end you may want to fade the music to a finish.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nitpicky things.

    - "...but your mom..." Watch the articulation. it sounded like "...butchure mom..."
    - "wobbly" was a little garbled and incomplete
    - Get a better flow on "..,the wind blew through your hair,..." by not hitting "wind". I mean, what else is going to blow through your hair?
    - Put a little more emphasis or glottal separation or vocal color in the words "panic" and "delight" - give those words their contrasting meaning.
    - Again, emphasize the contrast from "...your very FIRST ride, to this MORNING''S ride..." It's the difference in time and confidence level and ease from one to the other.
    - Nice tag

    The fade out is a little swift. Might not sound that way had the volume not been brought up so much at the end of the VO.

    Good stuff.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice. It's the perfect fit. Your performance creates a very lovely, warm, and romantic feeling. If there's any advice, it would be that you should raise your voice/volume at the last sentence a little bit so that the listeners can remember. Overall, wonderful job!

    Cheers

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear TomJVoiceover's recording

    Thanks for the feedback!

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    Peer Feedback:

    My high school choir director always harped on things like this.

    "whachoo" instead of "what you"

    He always asked us if we were sneezing.

    Peer Feedback:

    I really liked the read. Sounded very natural and inviting.
    I can see what James is taking about with "whachoo".
    Great job though!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Phil K.'s recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great work here! Nice pacing, clarity, pauses in the right place, right time. I thought this was done very, very well.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you Rolls.I'd like to learn other approaches to this type of script.Thanks for critique & encouragement.

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    Hi Phil, I enjoyed listening to you. Your voice is clear,but with a nice push of urgency. The quality was great too, nice job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Very nice, professional grade with pacing and copy interpretation right there. I did notice a bit of the New Englander accent, which wouldn't be problem for local spots, but may be a hinderance for anything outside of your region.

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    Thanks Hey Rickina.

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    Hello Quinn. Thanks for pulling my coattail on the accent.Linda gave me some exercises that I see I still need work on.Thank you again.

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    Acura -- Legend

    Script:

    Never before, and perhaps never again, will the luxury of a Legend be available for so little. Now thru December 2nd, your Acura Dealer of New England can offer you a Legend lease that will blow you away. No down payment. No hidden costs. Just an honest lease price you’ll find very easy to handle. But hurry, because your chance to lease the luxury of an Acura Legend for less disappears on December 2nd. Only at the Acura dealers of New England.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Here's a reset of one I did last April - just to check my progress. Please tell me what you think. Thanks in advance. E

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice job. Quality is good, your voice has a very relaxed feel to it and it suits this copy well. Very clear read and easy to listen to. The music bed blended nicely. My only hiccup was it sounded like you said "a Acura" instead of "an Acura" at one point. Other than that, well done!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the listen and the comments, spudcln.

    E

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    Very smooth and deep. I liked it. Your voice is well suited for this read.
    nice production as well.
    Great job.

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice!! Just right for a luxury car spot. Watch your enunciation, though. For example, "price" came out "pross." With your talent, I would invest in some coaching to polish up your delivery. Otherwise, nice read. Music worked perfectly.

    Peer Feedback:

    Mike, good catch on "price". BTW, I am getting coaching, but the Forum has also been a dynamite tool to get quality feedback like yours. Thanks for the props.

    E

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear knm_voice@yahoo.com's recording

    see what you think

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    Peer Feedback:

    I actually thought this recording was a little better than your Ada Ford demo because it had more brightness and energy to it. The recording quality was still clean, but I noticed the volume seemed to fade in and out throughout the read. Also, it sounded like you were trying to back off a little (maybe to avoid popping??), but some words were lost in the process. Like in the part, "lease the luxury of an Acura" the word "an" was faded into nothing and blended into the rest of the sentence.

    I still say you have a great voice with lots of natural potential. Keep it up!

    Peer Feedback:

    Pacing was too fast for me. There was some mouth noise perhaps you didn't drink enough water. good voice.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Transportation Practice. Comments welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Pay close attention to the words you hit and how hard you hit them. Starting with the hook, I wondered why you hit "and" harder than any other word. The enthusiasm is appropriate but somewhat misplaced on certain words.

    Peer Feedback:

    Agree with Bill. You seem to attack the words and then fall off in a predictable rhythm....try a more conversational tone.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Larry Terp's recording

    Redo. Based on Bill's fine observations, I smoothed out the hook and overall delivery. Went lower and smoother. Also, this time skipped over the urgency of "by Dec. 2nd" and drew out the "honest lease price". Comments welcome.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This is a big improvement to my ears, Larry. I'd go just a little further in the direction of a narrower pitch range and slightly smoother. Then add a little luxury car music to finish it off! If you feel so inclined. Really nice adjustment though on this read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Your read is good, but the "in a tunnel" sound is distracting.
    I would suggest closing the gaps in "never again,_ will the luxury", "lease price_you’ll find very easy" and " Legend for less_disappears on December 2nd"

    (underscore indicating gaps)

    Keep pushing ever onward!

    Wolf

    Peer Feedback:

    Larry, you sound articulate, confident and friendly. But there is something in your natural speech that I'm afraid needs serious attention. The only way I know to describe this would be "repetitive and sing songy". If I'm remember correctly, TheDarkMagician, mentioned something about you having a tendency to inflect upward on certain words, making your reads sound predictable. But I can hear a definite improvement on this take - it's smoother and more sophisticated than your first take, so that's very good. Still I'd urge you to seek the advice of a voice coach who could target the things you really need to work on.

    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have much faith in The Dark Magician, but "Nice Man" is right.
    Three times you said the name of the product, "Legend" without any balls!

    Peer Feedback:

    Good fit for this script

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    Click to hear Nelson Jewell's recording

    New Studio set with new mic (Studio Projects C1), new audio card (M Audio Delta 44). Thanks for any feedback on sound, delivery, etc.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The music and the style of read are not what I normally imagine when I think of the Acura brand. But I thought your more informal interpretation was very, very effective. Your new setup sounds excellent, no critiques on the production. Your delivery was also excellent--my one critique would be on the line "Acura for less disappears", where I don't hear the r on for.

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought your interpretation was right on the money. good quality recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Wow. I didn't hear any flaws. This is really good and commercial ready.

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    Excellent.Theres nothing else to say.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds good. Music selection and pacing. excellent

    Peer Feedback:

    I enjoyed your interpretation of this script. Nicely paced and articulated. Good job!

    E

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    I'm just new to this and checking which genres I should be trying

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    Peer Feedback:

    You sound tentative which to me, sounds like you're searching. You say you're checking for genres. I hear that.

    So....from what I'm hearing in this post.....you need to listen to this post critically. In the first few seconds, I heard a couple of slurs or lisps: "perhapth" and "Dethember thecond".

    Point being: there are some diction issues. If you want to hear a full syllable-by-syllable critique, Edge coaches are available for $27 and it's WAY worth the money.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would agree with Tom. The first sentence needs to pop. You need to draw folk’s in. "Never before & perhaps never again" listen to me! This is a big deal! I don't hear that, it starts kind of flat. Good voice & good potential in my opinion though.

    Peer Feedback:

    I would agree with Tom as well. Don't hold back.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Anthony Boskovich's recording

    Trying a fresh delivery approach but I have a tendency to shout I hope I didn't have the gain up too high.....Tried recording in a quieter room this time but Some noise may have sneaked in when I record projects for clients I pretty much vacuum seal myself inside the closet or my den my mike stand has a hard time fitting in the way my closet is set up

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Anthony, the read is still a bit shouty and you have added other extra words which are distracting.

    Nice energy and passion though.

    Yvonne

    www.yvonne-lynch.com

    Peer Feedback:

    There are number of iterations of this script in the Library. All but two of them begin with "Quality". So my assumption is, the first printed line in this script is actually the title of the spot. And as such, it isn't necessary to include that in the recording (especially since we can see the text) unless it is specifically asked for by the person conducting the audition. If this was an actual audition you would slate your name, take a beat to collect yourself and then go into the text. Whomever is conducting the audition already knows what the product/service is and/or if you submitted the recording yourself as an MP3, you would have labeled the file properly.

    All of that said, Yavonne is correct. It is kinda shout-y. Is this the way you would say this to someone standing 8 inches away from you? And you added some extra words. Copywriters are a little sensitive about that.

    Also consider that this is probably a 30 second radio spot (although it could be for TV), so you're close to 4 seconds too long. Those little "personality" things may seem interesting, but the little chuckle sounds condescending and the "ehhhh" sounded a little contrived. And it all slows down the delivery causing it to go long on time. You can stick those kind of things in by using the words that are already there on the page. And you missed or, more likely, forced the joke at the end. (The added word "the" didn't help.)

    The room you're in is really reflective and it sounds like you are too far from the mic. The sound quality is borderline acceptable, at best, for audition purposes. Lots of detectable hard edits (or use of a noise gate?). Sounds like you need to re-asses your space (with more sound deadening material), your configuration (mic placement and proximity) and hone your editing and processing skills.

    But as Dan and Dave might tell you, get the interpretation and delivery of the script down first.

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    Practice Recording:

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    All comments welcome. Hope your year is going great. Cheers!! 8-)

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nicely done! Some slight enunciation problems, but excellent presentation and sound!

    Peer Feedback:

    I like this script and think you have to voice and delivery to give it what it needs (it always sounds ill-suited to me when I try it). Really my only observation is that this is an ad for Alamo, and those where the times when the words became a little muddled. Just give Alamo the strength of the rest of the read and you'll nail it. (Thank you David Guzzone for pointing that out in my read the other day!)

    Peer Feedback:

    I agree with the comments above. Nice, professional sounding; little if any tension. Nicely done. If I were paying you for the commercial, however, I would criticize you for understating my product. I would have hit the word 'car' a little harder, too.

    Keep up the great work!

    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    slaucion --
    this is a great spot! very pro sounding to me.

    if you've been working on eliminating your Canadian (or French Canadian? can't remember) you've succeeded.

    cheers,
    Dave Saunders.

    Peer Feedback:

    Been working on a smoother read; chopping up the script.
    Working on neutrality, as well.
    Good ears dfsaund!

    All good comments. Thanks and cheers!
    8-)

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    Comments ideas always welcome .Regards Balazs

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Balazas,

    I really enjoyed your read and loved the background music, it really suited this spot! In some areas, I thought that you read too fast.

    Wishing you the very best!

    Many Blessings,

    Carol

    Peer Feedback:

    Carol thanks for your comment .
    Regards
    Balazs

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    Practice Recording:

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    I had some fun with this script and would love to get your input. Thanks in advance. E

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice. Maybe a little more staccato than your average luxury car commercial, but I can imagine--and accept-- that as your style. Diction is clear throughout, which makes the one slip ("And it's...") stick out.

    This is a long piece, hard to keep interesting. You do a great job building and completing that first thought, ending with "... all of us at Audi." Nice variety, sense and emotional flow. If this were the whole spot, I'd say you nailed it. (I know, that's really the first line of the second thought.)

    The second half is just as clear, makes just as much sense, but feels like we've been there already. You can only offer so much variety reading these lists of things the engineers do. A more radical shift in tone for the second half of the piece might make it more attention-grabbing. Imagine, maybe, that when the music changes it turns heavy metal--how different would the read become then?

    Peer Feedback:

    cbernzweig, I appreciate the thoughtful commentary. This was a challenging piece due to the length (probably a :60 spot) as you said. I'll keep your comments in mind. They were very helpful. Thanks.

    E

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    Thought I'd take a shot at it. All comments appreciated

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    Peer Feedback:

    Quite honestly, it sounds like a 100% pro performance..timing, delivery...voice is perfect. If you want any comments on improvement...sorry. I got nothing. A++

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    Really smooth delivery, Jerry. Very much enjoyed the performance. Demo-worthy.

    Peer Feedback:

    Jerry, I agree with Steven and Tom. Excellent job!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jimlight's recording

    Been acoustically tuning a V/O booth and utilizing a new Mic (Apogee MIC). I'm fighting outside ambience but believe I've EQ'ed and notched it out using Logic Studio X. One of my concerns now is, did I create any unintended consequences. The script is a genre I both enjoy and find appropriate to my range, but in this instance, I found it challenging and ridden with traps and a seemingly endless variety of differing approaches.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice phrasing and inflections, Jim. Your voice has a mature and credible quality, a touch of sophistication that does work well here. My suggestion would be to add just a bit of warmth; not a big smile or anything, but your tone sounds just a touch serious, almost chastising to my ear. Maybe you're focusing on too many things during your performance and just aren't totally relaxed. All in all, a really nice performance.

    Peer Feedback:

    I was trying to formulate a critique for this read and was having a hard time pinpointing what to say to what I was hearing. So I went back and listened to some of your previous posts and read some of the critiques. And then it came to me.

    It's something that Randye Kaye said: "Sometimes it helps to re-record the opening lines after you get to the close of the copy. Also, have you thought about the "moment before"?"

    You seem to hit your stride a little over half way through the copy (at "It's the driving force...") - the beginning is rather dead (energy wise) and a bit monotone, relating no specific POV.

    Watch the pronunciation of "PERSEVERANCE". It's "purr-sir-vier-ance". Yours sounded like "pier-sier-vier-ance".

    Randye had also mentioned mouth noise. It is still quite evident in this recording.

    There is also a "hollow" quality to the sound, like you are standing too far away from the mic and your voice is bouncing back from behind (or reflecting from behind you). It could also be strange artifacts from your EQ settings.

    And I'm going to contrast banciaux's comment about the "warmth" and "smile" with something else Randye said on another one of your reads - the "military authoritative" attitude or "boss-man" attitude. Nothing wrong in putting an "edge" to this copy. A smile, yes. But that knowing smile - more of a superior smirk, really. After all, it's not just any car. It's an Audi.

    Peer Feedback:

    Problem with "perseverance" and at "good enough"...the first being pronounced incorrectly and the second being slurred as "good 'n' uff."

    Not even listening with cans, I could hear the mouth noise.

    Also, as James stated, trying to come up with a critique, what's to consider? I didn't go back to previous reads as he did, I'll stick with this one. Bill suggested smile. I would suggest attitude and sophistication. AS James observed, I agree that the read sounds rather monotone ...and as a result that you're disinterested.

    Try doing the read with the attitude that you're privileged in having driven this car, know the advantages of the engineering over the "rest of the others" and why someone else should seek that same advantage...make them want to be part of the cult of Audi so to speak.

    Peer Feedback:

    Just heard an Audi commercial delivered by a male voice while listening to iTunes radio. Definitely had just a touch of smile and warmth. Sort of the "knowing smile" James described. If you're an Audi owner, you know what that smile means, I guess. Personally, my Accord and I just think you're a snob. ;-)

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    Practice Recording:

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    This is a second attempt at this script in as many days. I investigated "mouth noise" and found so many comments regarding: mic location; warm water; tea etc. I believe I cut it back but perhaps at the expense of presence. I probably have 30 cuts of this read and have very little idea any longer regarding which one is best (or even better). Nevertheless, thank you all for your input. Nothing is more valuable than objective feedback and I'm indebted to all of you.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Jimlight:
    It sounded a little too announcer like,with due respect sir,you have a high quality to your voice,possibly 'tinnie' the pace was good,not that I'm a expert,but it didn't sound authentic;try more conversational.

    Sir if your sitting in a quiet room,with a decent studio mic,maybe recording into Auralex,(sound absorbing form) with a spit screen,watch those "S's and "P's,and know how to remove noise,I use Audacity,removing noise is easy with this audio program.
    That should smooth things out; works for me.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Tampa,

    It may surprise you to know I agree 100 percent. I submitted this same script yesterday and attempted to attenuate my reads and setup today based on the comments I received. After listening to the 2 separate versions, there's no question I'm subjectively further away after today's work.

    I believe, if some of us are not careful, it's possible to overcompensate based on peer review. Not that the comments weren't appropriate and helpful, but being directed by a coach simply works much better for me.

    Perhaps the time will come when I'm able to make better use of this valuable forum.

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    Hey all. Let me know what you think. Just trying to establish myself.

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    Peer Feedback:

    The recording equipment makes for a rather strident sound here. That can be corrected over time. Don't worry about it at the moment. The real deal here is your read so you can...as you say...establish yourself.

    SLOW DOWN. As you paced this, it came in at 43 seconds and I got winded listening to it. Relax...think about the video that is going to pass above the words that are under it. Think about the tone you deliver...sophistication and class.

    This obviously needs to be a 60 second read. Not that every word needs to be present audibly during every second of the 60 seconds. But the pace needs to work for that length. Slow down and relax so that you don't sound like you're trying to go as fast as the car on the screen. You're talking to people who will spend 60k-plus on a car here. Romance them.

    Good luck.

    Peer Feedback:

    Good advice Tom. Mark, there will be visuals to accompany this so you need to understand that your voice will compliment that not overpower it. You should be talking under the visuals on reads like this. Radio is more in your face. The first question to ask yourself is, is this a radio spot or a TV spot, then breakdown the script and look for your key words to work with the visual.

    Peer Feedback:

    Way too fast was my first thought... I though I'd give a listen to a new talent, and see that Tom and DK did too. Good advice from them too.

    Let me add, that when you read a book, you read it like you speak (in your head). All that slows down when you have to listen to the info vice read it. So, really look at the punctuation. You blew through the first comma in the first sentence. Now, that said, punctuation is a guide. But let it guide you as to the information you impart. This is a really long script, but you have to find out what each sentence is saying, and within that, the stresses on each word to get that point across. You are guiding the listener/viewer to the finer parts of a fine automobile. Like Tom Said, "Romance it" a little.

    Best of luck

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    Another attempt at the subtle-type read. Let me know what you all think :)

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    Peer Feedback:

    I think you did very well with the subtle read. You made it sound conversational without sacrificing the urgency and intensity of getting your point across. I did notice that the first time the word "tangible" came up you pronounced it with a long A sound. You must have realized what you had done because the next time the word came up it had the correct short A sound.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Merocor. I like your voice but I thought the reading was choppy. I admit there were lots of words in there which needed emphasis, but it could have been done in a smooth and subtle way without too much inflections and breaks. Best.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the insight. I definitely see what you're referring to when you mean 'choppy'. I'll focus on that in my next reads.

    Peer Feedback:

    I like your voice! Overall, good read. Two words that sounded weird to my ears was the way you said intangible (first one) and calculation.

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    Practice Recording:

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Richurd,

    Your recording quality sounds great, and hey, so does your performance!

    Your voice is perfect for this, but I think you can back off the intensity a little bit. The opening almost sounds a little threatening. You lighten up by the last two lines and really hit that sweet spot.

    Nice job.

    :-)

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Rich, Not your best performance IMHO. It lacked the fundamentals where sentences ran into each other where breaks were supposed to occur, and you put breaks where they weren't required if read as written by the writer/director etc. THey would have has specific visuals to go along with the script at certain times. Not sure of what type of tone you were looking to set to represent the product/company. Afew things went of the rails here buddy, try it again and stay true to the piece.

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    Richurd -
    I really like this one. I like commercials better than the character reads.
    I like your delivery...I think it's really well crafted. "....INTANBIBLE....PUT YOUR HANDS ON..." really nice.
    the whole read is a nice performance.
    faster pace? maybe. depends on the director.

    BTW, the production was really crisp once again.
    nice job.

    DS

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    Everyones critique is spot on. I had a better read but was over a minute. I tried to bring the read in on time and suceeded. But it came at the expense of everything you all mentioned. I like this script and will do it again and ignore timing. Thanks all.

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    Very nice, RICHURD!! You believed in every word you spoke. Very believable. Loved the punches at the right time. Music bed a nice touch, too!! - gallardo

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    You go, Richurd!!! I LOVED IT, MAN!!!

    Jim

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    Very nice performance indeed, Rich. Bold and powerful delivery. Loved the production, too.

    Peer Feedback:

    Excellent delivery. A tad metallic. My old ears missed a word or two. You're superbly talented. Larry

    Peer Feedback:

    It's great to hear you having fun again. Well done!

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    Practice Recording:

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    There are two takes of this script which are slightly different. Please tell me what you think.

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    Peer Feedback:

    You are one of my favorites on this fourm. Nice job. Love the quality of your voice. Very clear read. the music bed went very well with the script.

    Peer Feedback:

    Elton, in both reads you lost articulation at "the story of joy continues'...it came out of my speakers as "the story uh joy"...you were more precise in both reads right up to that line and did it the same way both times. Other than that, I enjoyed the reads. Not so sure of the music bed, but that's one person's musical taste vs. another's.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Elton, I liked the second one better. The first vocal seemed to over power the music. The second was more subdued and fluid.

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    I feel like I'm improving and your comments are very helpful. Thanks.

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    My take.. too announcerish. You have a very good, resonant voice. But for a minute forget about the voice and concentrate on emotion. It sounds especially announcerish when you stretch out the words as if to highlight the your resonant timbre. Your objective should be to convey BMW's message. The voice is meant to compliment - not compete with the commercial's main message.

    Of the two reads, the second was better. It was somewhat less radio disc jocky-ish, and flowed better. Just my opinion, but I'm saying it like I'm hearing it.

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    Thanks Javier. I'm still working on that elusive "natural voice" while conveying the message with the proper emotion. I'm hearing the same thing from the coaches. Good take.

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    Natural voice??? WTH is that??

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    I meant to say "conversational style".

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    what a remarkable voice you have~ When the trumpet comes in it muffles your voice down a bit. The rest of the bed is perfect for your pitch.

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    That sounds beautiful. If I had to find something to suggest (an it's a very minor something), I think the long sentence starting with "Innovation" doesn't sound as smooth as all of the other sentences. Granted, it's a long sentence
    : -). Overall, really nice.

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    I appreciate the compliments and the constructive suggestions which will help me improve. Thank you.

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    I agree with the positives and negatives mentioned above, and I'll also add, you might try just a hint more of , BMW , standing out of the line.

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    Very nice Marianna, Its true that my music selection was inspired by the genre of work I am looking to pursue. I am working more towards the imaging and promo stuff as opposed to the audiobook world, hence the more edgy type of delivery, music etc. Great work ... the jazz approach, I'm not too sure, wasn't really a fan, but the read was nice, very close to the way I would have done it :)

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    Really adventurous! I like jazz behind anything. I would like to hear "joy" emphasized.
    Couldn't hear "milestone." Pay no mind to DK.

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    Nice tone.

    It's almost like you're blowing through the first 2 lines and it sounds like 'Joyous'. Find a way to punch up the word joy throughout. It's used 6 times in the script so it's clearly the emphasis of the commercial.

    Maybe just a bit more energy too. It's on the verge of being sleepy. A bit more seductive & alluring. A little more smile too, I don't know that I'm hearing joy in your voice.

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    Nice work Marianna. Your voice is smooth with good rhythm and the jazz in the background goes well together. The recording sounds clean from my headphones. Overall, very well done.

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    Very smooth. I loved the music but would have lowered the volume a little. I would have emphasized joy a little more so it sounded more joyous. Hope this is helpful.

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    A perfect read and a perfect choice of music and production. Very well done with a beautiful voice, too. If it had been another brand than a BMW such as a Cadillac or Lincoln, I would have thought it would be more appropriate. I wouldn't choose this commercial to sell BMW, The Ultimate Driving Machine. I would use you, the music, the production and your lovely voice to sell something with a more upscale luxury image but not a BMW. Still nicely done though.

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    Thanks Jim....I am a huge fan! I recorded this in response to another recording....just to provide an alternative. You are correct about the BMW branding.....I may tr