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    AllState Insurance

    Script:

    Congratulations, you just bought Allstate Homeowners Insurance. And now, if your home or property suffers a covered loss or is damaged, you'll be covered, and that's a good feeling. However there are some things that can't be replaced, so that's why it's is important to prevent these damages from occurring in the first place. Here, you'll learn what steps you can take to make your home safe and secure.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mstamp198's recording

    First time in the feedback forum. Let me know what I can improve!

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    Fashion/Travel/Feminine Products

    Script:

    American Fashion (upbeat, aspiring)

    These are the years to be free.
    To be foolish. To create. To fail. To be brave.
    To seek out what’s next.
    To get lost.
    To find yourself.
    To write your history.
    To be ... you.
    Be more. Be Hollister.

    Travel Tease (Upscale)

    At the gate the everyday vanishes. Here your thoughts are a little clearer. Your appetite for life a little sharper. This mountain, as captivating under summer flowers as it is under snow. Aspen is a one-of-a-kind resort. Unhurried. Carefree. And cozy, like an Alpine Village under a starry night.

    Feminine Product

    I...I am a real woman
    I take the subway
    I run for miles , and I do my hair
    I get my period too.
    So if you’re looking for the damsel in distress kind of a gal-you can go elsewhere. I'll be here, doin' my thing and wearing Carefree pads.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear juliannawasserman's recording

    Hi! I'm wondering about how to emphasize the words without enunciating them too loudly/harshly. I also want to make sure that the diverse adjectives have different effects and don't sound too similar to each other. I wasn't able to fit in more of the pieces that we've practiced-should I speak faster? Are these different enough from each other? Thanks!

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    Ipad 3

    Script:

    This is what we believe: Technology alone is not enough. Faster. Thinner. Lighter. These are all good things. But when technology gets out of the way, everything becomes more delightful. Even magical. That’s when you leap forward. And you end up with something like this: iPad 3

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Evan Dyal's recording

    Did two takes. Also trying to improve mic quality, but may need to get a new one, let me know how it sounds.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really loved the way you said "and you end up with something like this: iPad 3" - particularly the way you went up at the end at "like this" and "iPad 3" in the first version. I think introducing some more inflection/intonation earlier in the recording will give the spot more layers! I agree with you that the mic quality could be improved. I enjoyed listening, thanks for sharing!

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    Amstel Light

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    Hey... if life were perfect, magazines would never smell like perfume,dogs would walk themselves, and algebra would really come in handy.Well,look on the bright side,at least there’s AMSTEL LIGHT.It has only 95 calories,but you still get real imported taste.You don’t give up a thing.Who says nothing’s perfect?...Amstel Light.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Akapela Creations By Peter Anthony Makaveli's recording

    Recording quality on this one is messed up I went a little overboard on the effects and the space i recorded in had a lot of noise

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Akapela! I really like your voice and the pace you read the script. It would be interesting if you did another take with a cooler more suave toned down voice. Not sure it would be better, but it would be interesting to compare

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    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear mdarcy27's recording

    I recently moved my studio set-up to a new room. There is a "doubling" effect in my recordings now. That effect was not present in my old recording space. But, I am not sure the acoustics are the problem. It may be my mic.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello mdarcy27! Really like your voice and the pace in which you read the script. I definitely heard your mic problem, and there is certain word I may have added a little more inflection too, but overall I thought it was really good.

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    "Clem the Prospector - Nebraska Lottery"

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    Howdy folks, Clem the old prospector here to tell you how you can strike it rich, and you don’t even need a pick and shovel, all you need is a new Quick Pick from the Nebraska Lottery. With 6 chances to win, odds are you’ll do better than me diggin in this old mountain here.
    The new Quick Pick, from the Nebraska Lottery.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear SteveVO's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great job!! I liked the second read! Both were really well done but 2 was my pick! Great delivery and sound was spot on!

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    Prehistoric Planet -- Discovery Kids 2

    Script:

    Our prehistoric story includes more then just big dinos. That's right - there were some pretty cool looking mammals, just like you and me. These strange beasts roamed the earth alongside dinosaurs, but are often overlooked.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear gbocz21's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have my home studio set up yet but I will soon! Just looking for feedback on performance! :)

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the interpretation and pacing were good. Draws you in to want to hear more.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello:
    I thought your copy interpretation and pacing were good. Your voice is young and friendly so kids will find it pleasant to listen. The only thing I would chang, is that pause right before "are often overlooked." I think it flows better without it. Otherwise, very nice.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you! I appreciate it!

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    7 11

    Script:

    So it’s 2:00 in the morning...and you’re starving. Nothin’ in the fridge, and nothin’ in the cupboards. You don’t even have dog biscuits hangin’ around. You think about cooking, but then you remember the 3-alarm fire you started last time you tried using the stove. Well, check out 7-11. There’s gotta be one right near ya’. They have everything from burgers to tacos...24 hours a day...7 days a week. 7-11. Think of it as your own personal walk-in kitchen.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Akapela Creations By Peter Anthony Makaveli's recording

    another practice read /. i record everything I do al the time . I'll have my own studio very soon as I live in a home with quite a few other people it's hard to find a quiet space to do my work which makes it really hard when have jobs for clients and auditions to send off. but soon I'll have my space

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey man, I'll return the favor on feedback...I like it!! Kind of a different approach to it. Definitely have that attitude to it if you were really starving for a bite to eat! Recording quality sounds decent...a little bit of a hum going on...maybe subtle room noise but that's minor...great job!!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Peter:
    You make the script sound believable; like you've been there before! Very nice. The only thing I would say is the phrase "three-alarm fire" you emphasized the word alarm when it would flow better if you emphasized fire. A little nit-picky but that's what I would have done. Hope it helps.

    Noelle

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    Accu-Data

    Script:

    Welcome to Accu-Data payroll, the home of personalized payroll service. For over twenty five years delivering attention, accuracy and service. We know each client on a first name basis. Staff members answer our phones, not voice mail. Whether your business is large or small with our cutting edge technology we can respond to your specific payroll needs. Whether you’re paying two or two thousand employees, Accu-Data provides cost effective pricing guaranteed. Accu-Data is ready to show you what great service is all about. Call us today!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mnicholson2003's recording

    Practice, practice, practice!

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    Peer Feedback:

    nice smooth delivery. Very competitive. Great technical quality. This read is solid enough to take a few criticisms without sounding personal:

    If I were the director I'd ask for another take on the list "attention, accuracy and service'. It didn't seem natural. And I'd ask to Americanize the "aboot" at the end. It stands out, and could impact getting US gigs.

    The read could be tightened up a bit via editing. Some of the pauses seemed a half-beat too long.

    Having said all that, which are just fine tuning, the read is a really good one.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Dave! The whole "aboot" thing...to my ear, I hear and think I say "a bowt"...there's no "boot" in it...is there? haha! Darn Canadians.

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    60 second explainer

    Script:

    The challenge facing consumers today is that we get up to 5,000 marketing messages a day. Too often these ads are used to interrupt consumer’s entertainment, instead of adding value to the context the message is served. As a marketer, it’s tougher than ever to break through this clutter. Catching the consumer’s attention and moving them to action is becoming increasingly more difficult. So why not make it easy on yourself? Portray is the perfect marketing vehicle to inspire shoppers to follow a curiosity or passion, and immediately convert it into a purchasing experience. Showcase relevant updates on the latest products, promotions and can’t-miss events while daily shoppers are within close proximity to the point-of-purchase and in the purchasing state of mind. No other media platform can close the gap between an impression and instant gratification like Portray.

    67 people have played this

    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mnicholson2003's recording

    Another practice read.

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    Peer Feedback:

    glad I get to be the first to drop a comment on this. Very personal it felt like you were talking to me and it held my attention throughout. Recording quality sounded good through my monitors but the mix could have used a bit more EQ on the top end. keep working hard and keep uploading

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    Seventh Generation Hand Wash

    Script:

    Seventh Generation Hand Wash
    Seventh Generation Hand Wash is a wholesome, healthy and stylish solution for your kitchen or bathroom. Infused with gentle, naturally refreshing essential oils. Completely free of potentially irritating dyes, and artificial synthetic fragrances. A soothing, effective way to cleanse sensitive skin.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear meg.scanlon39's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    You have a nice, soothing, friendly sound to your voice that fits well with this type of spot. The pacing was good and well-paced. There is a smile in your voice that makes this pleasing to the ear. Some constructive notes: There is some mouth noise while you’re pronouncing “wholesome.” Also sounds like some mouth noise when you say “stylish” and the phrase “naturally refreshing essential oils” and in general through the rest of the read. The tone of your voice goes up on “oils,” but it sounds like should go down, based on how the copy is written. On the quality of the recording, it sounds like you may not be in a well-treated space. Almost sounds like you’re in a tin can. The sound appears to come in and go out on the word “infused.” I like your voice, and I think the biggest change I’d suggest is the space treatment.

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    Safety Glasses

    Script:

    It only takes a second for tragedy to happen. But it takes only a few seconds to prevent it. Remember – always put on your safety glasses. Spending that little extra bit of time is a smart investment.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear garyhoodoutloud's recording

    How is the sound, is my delivery boring or interesting?

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    Peer Feedback:

    I like the quality of your voice, and I think it is well-suited to this type of read. I found the sound quality to be good. It sounds like you may be in a treated space, which is a big consideration.

    On that first sentence, I'd suggest your tone going down on thew word "happen." That, to me, would add emphasis and seriousness to the weightiness of what you're saying - "It only takes a second for tragedy to happen." That's heavy, and you're voice going down on "happen" would really emphasize that and draw the listener even closer.

    I think I hear a little mouth noise between "happen" and "but." You say the word "small," when the copy said "smart" investment. I think adding some intentional smile in your voice after "but" will help brighten the sound and also make a good break between the seriousness of tragedy and the solution of putting safety glasses on.

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    Acura -- Connection

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    Make the ACURA CONNECTION, and connect with the style and performance of a winner! Introducing the exciting new line of ACURAs. World class automobiles, unsurpassed in quality, undeniably luxurious, and unbelievably reliable. That’s Acura for 2000. Make the connection!

    Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
    Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics? Do they think it really helps their campaign?
    It's ugly, uncalled for, and deceitful.
    So why do we allow them to continue?
    It’s time to level the playing field.
    You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
    This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
    Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.

    When was the last time you brought your kids to the zoo? Now you can bring the zoo home to them. Toddler Town has a brand new collection of zoo characters, designed to put a smile on every toddler’s face. A lovable herd of hippos, a dangerous den of lions, plus monkeys, giraffes, and big burly bears. It’ll keep the little ones happy for hours. So introduce your kids to the ZOO ... from TODDLER TOWN.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear mikehennessy's recording

    Any feedback on performance and sound quality is much appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the read was very authentic and highly believable. I don't see the right script, so I can't really comment on particular lines. Sound quality was very good, and I thought your voice and tone were perfect matches for the ad you read.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, meg.scanlon! I don't why the wrong script is up,but thank you for the comments!

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    No Days Off

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    Every man has a dream But dreams can decay from the bitter truth that There are NO SHORTCUTS You can’t cheat the process To be at a level of excellence
    To be the best at anything Takes sacrifice So sound the Alarm Letting everyone know that It’s time to go to work No Days Off
    That statement is more than a motto It’s a message that there’s no joking around When your dream is at stake
    In this game of life There is NO MERCY
    It’s a cause and effect relationship Between those who WIN and LOSE So it’s time to choose Will you maximize the opportunity at hand Knowing the hand of time Waits for no man
    Every move gotta be calculated to will your goals into existence … so persistence is key To stay locked into the vision
    …And one day you’ll see if the vision within is more real than your reality It could be the manifesto Of what your world could be No Days Off

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear MasonSVO's recording

    Recording a audition in my home studio. Looking for feedback on how recording sounds in my home studio as well as any performance feedback you may have.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Nice, consistent tone and attitude throughout the read. Perhaps consider a little more emphasis to the phrases in all caps, like NO MERCY. Recording quality sounded great.

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    eLearning Course Narration - Intro to axSpA

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    Script for custom audition
    Welcome to the Introduction to Axial Spondyloarthritis Course.

    The bones of the human body are divided into two groups, the appendicular skeleton and the axial skeleton. We’re going to focus on the axial skeleton which includes the bones of the head, vertebral column, thorax, and trunk.

    Understanding the structure of the vertebral column is important for your understanding of axial spondyloarthritis (also referred to as axSpA), so we’ll start there. Click or tap the spinal column to continue.

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear MasonSVO's recording

    Recording a audition in my home stuido. Looking for feedback on how recording sounds in my home studio as well as any performance feedback you may have. I recorded 3 different takes

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    Peer Feedback:

    Im listening to this and it seems as if your trying too hard to sound "educational" and it lost my attention after the first sentence on all three takes. Im just not sure who your message is trying to target. It sounds very "esseyish" like your just reading a passage aloud in a classroom or something but not very personalized in regards to someone who struggles with the disease. my suggestion is to try and warm up to the listener from a direct yet highly but not overly compassionate standpoint. recording quality was good no major flaws in my opinion.

    Peer Feedback:

    Submitting Voice123 scripts is sort of a no-no. Typically, actual audition scripts are copyrighted. Good to hear fellow V123'ers though - I know my competition ;-)

    Great job on tough medical terms.
    I would back off the strict enunciation. It makes an already technical explainer a little less comfortable to listen too. (not a lot, just a little). It's a safe assumption that the audience is a group of highly trained technical experts, but still, put every bit of professional polish on the read. Conversational enunciation makes you sound like you're one of the experts in the room too.

    one question, Is 'appendicular' pronounced app-en-dic-u-ler, or app-en-deck-u-ler?You kept saying the latter. I haven't googled, so I'm not sure. I would have guessed the former.

    Hope that's helpful,
    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks Dave I was unaware of that but thinking through it makes sense :) and I really appreciate the feedback! Thank you!

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    Rei

    Script:

    The Earth doesn¹t concern herself with deadlines. Everything is a work in progress. Even after 6 million years, the Colorado River is still patiently carving the Grand Canyon. There’s something to be learned there. Take your time. Breathe deeply. Enjoy the view. Just remember to bring a GPS receiver or a compass so you can find your way home.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear alicia.ellson's recording

    No home studio used. Performance feedback, please. Working on envisioning my audience and my perspective to avoid sounding monotoned.

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    Peer Feedback:

    First and foremost you have a wonderfully unique voice! As such you have to adjust or over/under emphasis different things to make it sound more like you're connecting with the audience. Maybe try several different takes one natural, one under exaggerated, and one over exaggerated. Then listen to them find what works in what part of the copy and then blend them together for a fantastic voice over. For example make the last line in the copy have a bit more humor as if you're talking to someone close who tends to get lost a lot. I hoped this helped. Keep up the good work!

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    Apple

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    At Apple, we design our computers specifically for the needs of education. We design them to be powerful enough to prepare high school students for the technology they’ll encounter in the future. Yet we also design them to be easy enough for a first grader to use. We design our computers to run all of the Macintosh programs schools are already using; and we design them to run a whole new family of enhanced software that makes graphics, video and animation even more life-like and exciting.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear alicia.ellson's recording

    No home studio used. Performance feedback, please. Working on envisioning my audience and my perspective to avoid sounding monotoned.

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    Peer Feedback:

    This copy is sounds like it is almost an advertisement directed towards schools to have them buy Mac's over PC's. To me it seems like your read of the copy is sounding more like a training/tutorial rather than trying to sell it. Make sure you're putting the same energy you have at the end of the script through the entire copy

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    Back to Life

    Script:

    Back to Life Journal
    Sadly, too many times people with back and neck pain get a prescription of disability when they go to the doctor. "Don't play tennis. Don't play golf. Don't go fishing." While a day of rest may be okay right after an injury, the best therapy for back pain is movement. In fact, too much rest can make muscles and tendons less flexible - and more prone to future recurrent strain and back pain. Fact: You need a 20 minute walk to counter the effects of three hours of lying down. How would you know this? You'd learn that and more by reading our free 16-page Back to Life Journal. The Journal provides tips for those with back pain on how to get back to tennis, back to golf, or back to biking. Download your copy of the Back to Life Journal at NorthJerseySpineGroup.com.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear noelleh's recording

    Please evaluate for room acoustics and performance. Just getting back into VO after a year-long hiatus and determined to make this a success this year!!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great volume felt like we were having a conversation and I could relate to the script. Needs more inflection on changes in script ex: "Fact".

    Peer Feedback:

    I think you're interpretation of the copy is great. I think the only thing I would recommend is trying different paces. It felt a bit slow sometimes not by much but enough to make it feel not as fluid. Other than that it sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    room acoustics: I hear room reverb. I think you could use more absorption - not foam, but something like an insulation gobo. Here's a general idea:
    https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wayusy-R9w8&t=82s

    performance: I think your voice is really competitive. If you're really committed to a successful year, you should also invest in some coaching if available. Sharpen the saw, and continue learning.

    All the best, and GOOD LUCK!
    DS.

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    The Lego Brick

    Script:

    The Lego Brick is an old invention by today's standards. The first plastic brick was molded in 1949. Since then, thousands of new and unique Lego elements have been developed. Pick a Lego brick from a box today and it will fit with any brick molded decades ago.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear jacobmpdonaldson's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    You got me interested in legos and invoked feeling during the read. Breath pause out of place on " have been developed" and "decades"

    Peer Feedback:

    You're interpretation of the copy sounds more commercial than what I think the script is made for. It seems almost documentary-esque, try not trying to make it an EPIC piece but let your natural tone come out of the piece

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    How to use Epipen (for video)

    Script:

    It's very important to always have easy access to Epipen, and to use it at the first signs of a severe allergic reaction. Here's how. Remember these two simple steps: Grasp your Epipen auto injector with the orange tip pointing downward. "Blue to the sky." Remove the blue safety cap by pulling straight up. Do not bend or twist it.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear kanako1's recording

    Any feedback is appreciated. Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great read and excellent pacing. Some lip smacking throughout.

    Peer Feedback:

    Take sounds good other than mouth noises throughout. It might help to place yourself further away from the mic or adjust some settings if you are already a good distance away.

    Peer Feedback:

    Maybe be less "cheerful" or soothing for a medical emergency how-to. Use a little more staccato for an urgent step-by-step instruction.

    Meh, just my 2 cents. The director and client would make that decision.

    -DS

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    Home Depot

    Script:

    The Home Depot is more than a store. Whether it’s supplies, tools, or just a little advice. We’ve got you covered. So stop procrastinating. Come to The Home Depot and start checking off some of those items on that “to do” list. The Home Depot. You can do it. We can help.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear shreevidz's recording

    Looking for feedback on delivery and sound quality.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Love your voice. I could imagine myself listening to this ad and being encouraged to check off that list. This made me FEEL! A -P- popped on "We can help".

    Peer Feedback:

    Great read! Delivery is spot on. The sound every now and then felt a little "boxy" try using equalizers to help reduce that sound. Other than that fantastic

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    Purina Pro Plan OM - Bella

    Script:

    Bella and I have been through everything together. But you try telling your best bud that shes put on a few extra pounds. (Bark).
    Thats why now I only feed her Purina Pro Plan OM.

    Purina Pro Plan OM contains no fillers and is proven to make dogs visibly healthier in just 2 weeks. Plus it’s made with the real chicken and beef that she loves.

    Best part is Bella is back to being her old energetic self again. Now, If only i could get her to stop stealing my slippers.

    For a limited time get 20% off your first bag , by signing up for the healthy dog challenge at purina.com/challenge
    Purina Pro Plan OM. Because Healthy Dogs are Happy Dogs

    (by NateVo)

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear NateVo's recording

    Dog food spot I wrote based off some samples and some real ads. Is this interesting/good enough for a possible demo spot, and how do you feel I can improve it more? Looking for feedback on everything and anything. Thanks in advance !

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your audio quality sounds good to me, but I'm no expert. Your pauses in the 2nd paragraph sound a bit unnatural, but I like how your voice lilts in the rest of it.

    Peer Feedback:

    Great script and really nicely read. you paced it for :30, another nice detail.

    Production thoughts: Music bed is levelled a bit high for a VO audition. Let the voice come through a little more. Also the dog bark sounded like a sneeze :-)

    Great job. nice spot.

    DS

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    Dove Sensitive Skin Commercial

    Script:

    There are products made for sensitive skin.But there's nothing quite like sensitive skin dove - It’s the mildest, perfume free sensitive skin bar ever made. No wonder, Doves the one that dermatologists recommend most to keep your skin looking healthy and feeling soft. Dove. For the beauty that’s already there.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Shadiasabagh's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Shadia, Pretty good First pass. I really like the warmth that your brought to "there's nothing quite like sensitive skin dove". It did get a little choppy around No Wonder..." I would like to hear more of that warmth from the second line later on as well, particular around the keywords : mildest, looking healthy, feeling soft, perfume free. Your voice was definitely clear and easy to understand and I think its a good match for this spot.

    One thing I picked up from a coach that helps me with tone. is to talk to real person. for ex. Id maybe say my sister who gets severe breakouts using regular soap, and she's frustrated because she's tried everything. then I would imagine the most likely conversation wed be having before I say my first line and use it as a lead in. for ex.
    Me: Have you tried dove sensitive skin? Sister: I've tried other sensitive skin products before, it doesn't work...

    Take it all with a grain of salt of course, I am not a voice coach just a peer. see what works for you and throw away the rest.

    Best,
    Nate

    Peer Feedback:

    I love your first sentence, but the tone shifted in the second. By the time I got to "ever made. No wonder" I wasn't sure what you were going for anymore. You nailed the s at the end of dermatologists! I didn't feel your last "Dove" was the most grounded, product representative version of the name. Also, no offense, but were you speaking through a cold or nasal congestion? I like your voice though, and I look forward to hearing the best representation of it.

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    Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let's look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The "Introduction" tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the "Enter" button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let's continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Alexa Bee's recording

    I haven't set up my studio space yet, so I'm looking more for feedback on my performance rather than the recording quality. Thanks!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Alexa, I thought this was really good. the pace and tone felt natural ad engaging. really good job. I did hear some mouth clicks throughout that were a little distracting, the mouse in "Hover your mouse" got a little lispy, but I didn't notice it anywhere else. Solid read

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    Bitter Butter

    Script:

    Better Botter bought some butter
    But she said this butter's bitter
    If I put it in my batter
    It will make my batter bitter
    So she bought some better butter
    Put it in her bitter batter
    And it made her bitter batter better

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear amarti65@kent.edu's recording

    First time VO ever. Reason for Quality - Forced to turn down gain very low due to fan running in complex. Will find time when it is not running to take advantage of more gain. Tech - Mic - Bird BlueBird Pre-Preamp - Triton FetHead Phantom Interface 2i2

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    Peer Feedback:

    I don't have the trained ear to know bitter, better or best audio, but I like how clear yours sounds. Thanks for posting what you used, since I've started looking for mics and yours sounds good at a decent price point. Your read was great and wasn't monotonous.

    Peer Feedback:

    If background noise will be a frequent problem, you might benefit from a denoiser. With a pure noise sample, they can "magically" null out the noise waveform. They work great.
    I use Acon Digital DeNoise, but there are lots of other ones.

    BTW, gain adjustments won't help with the noise problem. The ratio (dB difference) between your voice and noise will remain constant where ever you add gain in the system.

    -DS

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Richard.Hawks's recording

    Trying to connect with the script and convey emotion

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hello Richard:

    I heard nothing concerning as far as recording quality. No background noise, no word stumbles. You did a wonderful job of conveying emotion. The pauses served to emphasize important words. The one thing I would say is that you may have to pick up the pace of your delivery just a bit. Your voice tone is magical. I could listen for hours! Just a bit more energy, a little faster.

    Peer Feedback:

    First of all, I was smiling before you finished your first sentence. Other than preferring you speed up a little, you sound great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you both so much. Practice time and implementing tips from good feedback has been paying off.

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    "Who Moved My Cheese" excerpt

    Script:

    Once, long ago, in a land far away, there lived four little characters who ran through a maze looking for cheese to nourish them and make them happy. Two were mice named “Sniff” and “Scurry” and two were little people; beings who were as small as mice but who looked and acted a lot like people today. Their names were “Hem” and “Haw”. Due to their small size, it would be easy not to notice what the four of them were doing but if you looked closely enough, you could discover the most amazing things. Every day the mice and the little people spent time in the maze looking for their own special cheese. The mice, “Sniff” and “Scurry”, possessing simple brains and good instincts, searched for the hard nibbling cheese they liked, as mice often do. The little people, “Hem” and “Haw” used their complex brains filled with many beliefs and emotions to search for a very different kind of cheese, with a capital C, which they believed which they believed would make them feel happy and successful.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Emgeeyo's recording

    Exploring and practicing different styles of reading. This is my second offering. Please let me know what you think. Thanks

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    Peer Feedback:

    absolutely love your voice and accent !! The first line by the time it ended .. you had changed your delivery...which was perfect I thought. Some words are rushed and some words are packed together to tightly .. slow a bit and keep the storyteller delivery you started with .. that should help with your breathing to. good stuff !

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    Breast Cancer Research

    Script:

    Remember your best friend from childhood? Remember swearing you'd be best friends forever. Well she just found a lump in her breast. one out of every eight women will develop breast cancer in her lifetime. With your help we will change that statistic. So join the fight. If not for yourself, then for someone you love.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Emgeeyo's recording

    Hi there, your constructive feedback will be greatly appreciated. I'm practicing and testing my environment. Please excuse my heavy breathing as I'm recovering from the flu. Many thanks Enter

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    Peer Feedback:

    Emgeeyo, I thought the delivery tempo and inflections were good. The technical sound does have some background hissing.

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    Bud Grant

    Script:

    After spending four years in the Canadian Football League as a player, Grant went on to start a coaching legacy as just a 29-year-old. He proceeded to lead the Winnipeg Blue Bombers to six Grey Cups over the next 10 years, winning four of them. Ten years later, Grant came home to take over as the head coach of the NFL's Minnesota Vikings.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Tom Z's recording

    Interested in thoughts on overall sound quality.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Tom Z - The recording quality sounds great to me. Your voice shines through with clarity. If you are welcoming other feedback, I just noticed that the "t" at the end of both mentions of "Grant" seems to fall off. Other than that it woulds fantastic! Thanks for sharing. -Vidya

    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice read. I liked the pace, and the flow.

    I thought the sound quality was a little muddy. Maybe EQ some of the high end back in? maybe too much foam in your recording space? All easily fixable.

    You've got skills.

    cheers,
    DS

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    Poof

    Script:

    “Poof" by leawms

    Script:

    Have you ever noticed what happens when you put in a movie?
    It's amazing.
    You just stick it in,
    Sit back,
    Hit play, and...
    Poof.
    The rest of the world just disappears.
    Gone.
    Suddenly, it's just you and your family.
    You remember them. Your family. Some of them look like you.
    At Movie Gallery, we have thousands of great movies. Including your favorite holiday movies plus the latest releases. And every one of them is guaranteed to have the same magical powers.

    Movie Gallery.
    Play on.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear geilatanb's recording

    I’m interested in learning more about the industry and this is my first recording ever. I was playing around with the iMovie app on my phone and recorded my recording, hence the sound quality. I think I did well. How does it sound?

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    Peer Feedback:

    Really nice first effort. Adding a music bed to a read is a bold first try too.
    do a couple more, then if you'd like to continue, find a good teacher/coach.
    Worry about mics and recording spaces later.

    cheers,
    DS

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Geilatanb,
    Liked the happy brightness in your tone. There were a couple of hesitant word-links but I believe the more you practice, your flow will improve and everything else will hppefully fall into place. The music was a good touch.

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    Cleaner Elections

    Script:

    Smear campaigns…mud slinging…twisting the truth.
    Why do politicians resort to such underhanded tactics? Do they think it really helps their campaign?
    It's ugly, uncalled for, and deceitful.
    So why do we allow them to continue?
    It’s time to level the playing field.
    You want our vote? Then focus on the issues that affect all of us.
    This election season, advocate for a clean election process.
    Paid for by the committee for cleaner elections.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Eno_'s recording

    First attempt ever.

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Eno ! put more of you into the script and slow down a bit...use your arms and hands to help inflection....your an upset voter don't forget ! I like your voice and I can hear some "Pipes" in there, keep it up man !

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice voice. I'd say the same: slow down, and put more of yourself into it. But you have good inflection. The recording quality seems pretty good - I'm just on a laptop.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Eno,

    Good clear voice and recording (via headphones).
    I agree about sharing more of your personality through your dynamics.

    Keep growing!

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey there Eno,

    You have a great recording voice! I'd say slow it down a bit, and work on putting more emotion into the reading. We all know how frustrating politics can be when politicians resort to these tactics, and we should sense that in your voice.

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    Demo Recording:

    Click to hear emmafrancislance's recording

    I think I am looking for affirmation from someone who isnt my mom. lol smh

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    Peer Feedback:

    Great work! I enjoyed these clips!

    Peer Feedback:

    skin care... dropped the end of care, same with light as air. I'm a newbie so take this with that in mind.

    You have a lovely voice and you're easy to listen to. Maybe the music is a tad too high? maybe you can increase bass boost? I did lose the end of those words.

    You sound amazing, I wish you the best!

    Peer Feedback:

    You sound really good!
    Maybe the music overpowers your voice just a tad bit, but other than that, sounds like I am listening to my local radio station!

    Peer Feedback:

    I love the quality of your voice and especially love the energy in the JC Penney's spot! Agree with the other comments about the music being a bit too loud, especially in the Whole Foods spot. Thanks for sharing!!

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    Audition Recording:

    Click to hear Kristian A. E.'s recording

    This is an audition I did on Friday for a book. Unfortunately, I didn't get the job. I just wanted to upload the audition here and get feedback on if the performance and whatnot was ok. I get if the author just didn't think my voice fit the part, but I'm not ok with doing a bad job. Any feedback to help me grow is greatly appreciated! Thank you! -Kristian

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your character was great! Maybe there was a little too much intensity on parts that weren't meant to be intense? I do think you did a good job though!

    Peer Feedback:

    Thank you, that helps me feel better about it!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought the read was good. if anything, I felt that it may of lacked variety. Its hard to articulate, but particularly around the troll kicking the sword away. it felt a little matter of fact. Also I would advise that you don't get hung up on auditions too much. there's way too many factors that go into play and most of them aren't in your control. send them then forget they exist.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks. I'm working on developing that tough audition skin.

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    "Ordeal in Space "by Robert A. Heinlein

    Script:

    Maybe we should never have ventured out into space. Our race has but two basic, innate fears; noise, and the fear of falling. Those terrible heights—Why should any man in his right mind let himself be placed where he could fall…and fall…and fall—But all spacemen are crazy. Everyone knows that.

    The Medicos had been very kind, he supposed. “You’re lucky. You want to remember that old fellow. You’re still young and your retired pay relieves you of all worry about your future. You’ve got both arms and legs and are in fine shape.”
    “Fine shape!” His voice was unintentionally contemptuous. “No, I mean it,” the chief psychiatrist had persisted gently. “The little quirk you have does you no harm at all—except that you can’t go out into space again. I can’t honestly call acrophobia a neurosis; fear of falling is normal and sane. You’ve just got it a little more strongly than most—but that is not abnormal, in view of what you have been through.
    The reminder sent him to shaking again. He closed his eyes and saw the stars wheeling below him again. He was falling…falling endlessly. The psychiatrist’s voice came back through to him and pulled him back. “Steady old man! Look around you.”
    “Sorry.”
    “Not at all. Now tell me, what do you plan to do?”
    “I don’t know. Get a job I suppose.”
    “The company will give you a job, you know.”
    He shook his head. “I don’t want to hang around a spaceport. Wear a little button in his shirt to show the was once a man, be addressed by a courtesy title of captain, claim the privileges of the pilot’s lounge on the basis of what he used to be, hear the shop talk die down whenever he approached a group, wonder what they were saying behind his back—no thank you!
    “I think you’re wise. Best to make a clean break, for a while at least, until you are feeling better.”
    “You think I’ll get over it?”
    The psychiatrist pursed his lips. “Possible. It’s functional you know. No Trauma.”
    “But you don’t think so?”
    “I didn’t say that. I honestly don’t know. We still know very little about what makes a man tick.”
    “I see. Well I might as well be leaving.”
    The psychiatrist stood up and shoved out his hand.
    “Holler if you want anything. And comeback to see us in any case.”
    “Thanks.”
    “You’re going to be all right. I know it.”
    But the psychiatrist shook his head as his patient walked out. The man did not walk like a spaceman. The easy, animal self-confidence was gone.
    Only a small part of Great New York was roofed over in those days; he stayed underground until he was in that section, then sought out a passageway lined with bachelor rooms. He stuck a coin in the slot of the first one which displayed a lighted “vacant” sign, chucked his jump bag inside, and left. The monitor at the intersection gave him the address of the nearest placement office. He went there, seated himself at an interview desk, stamped in his finger prints, and started filling out forms. It gave him a curious back-to-the beginning feeling; he had not looked for a job since pre-cadet days.
    He left filling in his name to the last and hesitated even then. He had had more than his bellyful of publicity; he did not want to be recognized; he certainly did not want to be throbbed over—and most of all he did not want anyone telling him he was a hero. Presently he printed in the name “William Saunders” and dropped the forms in the slot.
    He was well into his third cigarette and getting ready to strike another when the screen in front of him at last lighted up. He found himself staring at a nice-looking brunette. “Mr. Saunders,” the image said, “will you come inside please? Door seventeen.”
    The brunette in person was there to offer him a seat and a cigarette. “Make yourself comfortable Mr. Saunders. I’m Miss Joyce. I’d like to talk with you about your application.”
    He settled himself and waited, without speaking.
    When she saw that he did not intend to speak, she added, “Now take this name “William Saunders” which you have given us—we know who you are, of course, from your prints.”
    “I suppose so.”
    “Of course I know what everybody knows about you, but your action in calling yourself “William Saunders,” Mr.—“
    “Saunders”
    “—Mr. Saunders, caused me to query the files.” She held up a microfilm spool, turned so that he might read his own name on it. “I know quite a bit about you now—more than the public knows, and more than you saw fit to put into your application. It’s a good record, Mr. Saunders.”
    “Thank you.”
    “But I can't use it in placing you in a job. I can't even refer to it if you insist on designating yourself as Saunders.”
    “The name is Saunders. His voice was flat, rather than emphatic.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Deaner65's recording

    My first attempt at Audiobook reads . All feedback appreciated..... go harder on character voices ? etcetera. Thx so much !

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    Peer Feedback:

    Your voice is awesome!

    I like the character development but it all has a "in a world" feel. A little breathy to listen to for a long story.

    Pronunciation and clarity are very good!

    Peer Feedback:

    Nice read. Pleasant voice that is easy to listen to in long form.

    I can hear a Canadian accent? It's a little distracting to my American-centric ears. You might want to learn to turn it on and off as needed.
    I had to learn to drop (minimize) my Chicago accent, which isn't competitive in most gigs.

    cheers,
    DS

    PS: haha -- "Mr. Saunders"...made me smile.

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks for the feedback ! Mr. Saunders help me find my Canadian accent.. where specifically did you hear it...I'm afraid I wouldn't know where to listen... I am Canadian and deaf to my accent ! thanks again

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    InfoGroup promotion

    Script:

    Welcome to your innovative future with Infogroup. Infogroup is the fuel behind the growth of thousands of small businesses and over 400 Fortune 500 companies. For over 35 years, we've been helping companies increase sales and customer loyalty through our high value data, market intelligence, and innovative solutions. We're passionate about fueling our clients' business growth, and work tirelessly to help our clients connect and engage with their most valuable audiences. The future has never looked brighter.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear ycollymore's recording

    I'm trying a new genre and mic. Would love to have comments.

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    Peer Feedback:

    I really enjoy your accent its comforting and trusting, pacing is good ..pay attention to your micro pauses for more impact on the "power words" in the script .a slight pause and more inflection on those words ..I think with your voice its gonna sound great. Microphone sounded a little hollow. . cleaned up a bit on that last section. Doesn't sound like its getting the full richness of your voice. Nice work overall !

    Peer Feedback:

    You enunciate the words with precision and clarity but at the expense of passion and energy. You got this!

    Peer Feedback:

    I loved your tone, tempo, pitch and enunciation. I thought they were perfect for a corporate narration such as this. My "ears" are still pretty green, but I also thought that there is a bit of a hollow, tinny sound to the recording and the volume is, perhaps, a little low. Nice job!

    Peer Feedback:

    Enjoyed the tone of your voice and the read. My "ears" are still pretty green as well but it sounded like there was a fan or some sort of background noise. And there is a difference in "the future is brighter" part at the end versus the rest of the audio.

    Good job....

    Peer Feedback:

    I absolutely LOVE your voice. Sounds soothing. Your voice would sound nice for a documentary...

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    2 Virtual Tours/Morton Arboretum

    Script:

    2 Virtual Tour/E-Learning Scripts
    Morton Arboretum

    Welcome to Morton Arboretum, home to more than 36 HUNDRED native trees, shrubs, and plants. This virtual guide provides a snapshot of what to expect when you visit our Wheaton, Illinois location. First, let’s look at how to get the most from your virtual tour. See the 5 Main tabs across the top of your screen--Introduction, Trees, Shrubs, Plants, and Frequently Asked Questions? The “Introduction” tab is highlighted because your tour automatically started here when you clicked the “Enter” button on the home page. Use your mouse to click on a different Key page. Each Key page lists subcategories in its left pane. Hover your mouse over each subcategory to view a drop-down menu, then click the subtopic you want. Use the black scroll bar to navigate subcategories. Use the white scroll bar at the right of your screen to navigate each Main page. Now let’s continue.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Will-Reierson's recording

    I have a problem with mouth clicks, I'm sure. I feel like I'm drinking enough water and warming up properly, but I could be wrong. I left them in on this take, but usually, I'd spend at least ten minutes on a recording like this removing all the mouth noise. Am I doomed? Help! Also, how's my pacing/prosody? Any help is most appreciated!

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    Peer Feedback:

    I liked this a lot. The pacing and overall tone sounded appropriate. The only thing I would suggest is perhaps having a downward inflection on the word "questions" (in frequently asked questions?), since it refers to one of the tabs on the screen. Not sure why there's a question mark. Otherwise, great read!

    Peer Feedback:

    I thought your tone and pacing was great overall! I kind of thought the line, "See the 5 main tabs..." sounded like you are slightly "annoyed". And I got a little distracted by the mispronunciation of "Arboretum" :). I really did enjoy this read, though! Nice work!

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Richard.Hawks's recording

    Looking to get some feedback on everything with this one. Performance, Sound, etc. Thanks in advance to everyone that's provided all the great feedback in the past. Its been truly helpful.

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    Peer Feedback:

    My main advice is to connect more. To my ear, it doesn't sound like you're really feeling what you're saying. My recommendation is to listen to other PSA's online and hear how they're being delivered. It will give you a better idea of how you can use emotion and inflection to convey a mood.

    For example; on the line 'but sometimes, words can get you into trouble' there should be a tone change. You've gone from speaking about ways that words can make the world a better place, to how they can seriously ruin peoples lives.

    Avoid rushing through the sentences. You've got plenty of spaces between them, but you aren't taking any time to put emphasis on any of the words within the sentences themselves.

    I'd also work on your diction. It's mostly a result of your accent, but had to listen to some of the words twice before I could figure out what they were, especially the word 'balloons'.

    In terms of recording quality, it sounds fine to me, though the music could be hiding something.

    You're making progress, so keep it up! Just think more about what you're saying and listen to how other people do it. That should help.

    Best,

    -Will

    Peer Feedback:

    Thanks so much. I definitely will keep everything in mind and put it into practice immediately.
    Two words regarding sound. Parametric EQ...LoL!
    I've been so focused on getting the audio portion in order.... I'll try this tip you provided going forward...

    Thanks for the feedback....

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    Paid Job Recording:

    Click to hear Hedley_01's recording

    Hey! This is my first commercial demo recorded at the soundproof space at my Library. I am wondering if this is good enough to land VO jobs? Of any kind, haha. Please provide feedback on read and sound quality!! Thanks, Hannah

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    Peer Feedback:

    To my ears the sound quality sounds good. I'm still rather new myself as well but I think it sounds great!

    Peer Feedback:

    Sounds great! Clean delivery. I'm still a work in progress, so others may hear other areas for improvement. Recording quality sounded fine to me.

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    Disney Cruise

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    Disney Cruise
    Why choose a Disney Cruise? Because there are so many opportunities for fun and relaxation for everyone! Splash it up in one of our freshwater pools. Relax in a spacious stateroom. Enjoy enchanting, family friendly entertainment, or, spend some time in an adults only lounge while your kids see a Disney Show. We have the perfect vacation for everyone in the family. Feel that Disney magic! Call now for more information on how to book your Disney Cruise today. Or visit DisneyCruise.com.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear meg.scanlon39's recording

    I would love some feedback about my pacing, pausing and overall sound quality:) Thank you!

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hi! Your tone and pacing sound really good to me on this one. The delivery has a nice flow and you vary the pacing throughout which keeps the listener engaged. I especially like your interpretation of the "Splash it up" line. (sounded splashy!)

    I do hear a lot of room noise and you sound muffled which distracts the listener. I'd recommend cleaning that up.

    Also, I recommend taking into consideration the punctuation in the script in two areas:
    - There's a comma before and after "or" in the "Enjoy enchanting, family friendly entertainment, or, spend some time" - But the delivery doesn't reflect these commas so I'd tweak that part.
    - On the last two sentences, I'd make sure to pause appropriately after the first sentence since there's a period there (Call now...). and also adjust the inflection of "today" accordingly. Right now it sounds like its all one sentence.

    I hope this helps and thanks for sharing this!

    -Vidya

    Peer Feedback:

    Hey,

    I second everything that Vidya said. The sound quality sounded like it was panning in and out and wasn't very smooth. Apart from that, your tone is friendly and easy to listen to!

    Peer Feedback:

    Totally agree with the prior comments as well. The sound quality definitely is the obstacle. I like your voice and everything else was really good....

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    Washington Mutual

    Script:

    Tired of getting played every time you get cash out of an ATM? Then start using a Washington Mutual ATM. Unlike some other banks who force you to pay an arbitrary surcharge, when you get your money out of our ATMs, we don’t - even if you’re not a Washington Mutual customer. Surcharge-free ATMs from Washington Mutual, just the way nature intended them to be.

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    Practice Recording:

    Click to hear Evan Dyal's recording

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    Peer Feedback:

    Hey Evan, I think you're on the right track here...your second take is better than the first for sure...decent pace in that one. Not sure where or on what you are recording your voice but the quality suffers. Sounds thin.

    Peer Feedback:

    Hi Evan,

    I think that the performance is OK, it sounds like you are reading from a script though. Your tone of voice is easy going and nice to listen to. The quality of your recording needs improvement, maybe a different mic? It sounds muffled/distorted.

    Peer Feedback:

    Sound quality needs to be addressed. Definitely sounds thin and a little distorted in some spots.

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